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MeisterBabylon
2011-05-26, 10:08
Wow, this turns out to be alot harder than I had originally thought; months ago when I was doing research I could have swore there were more materials on the Holy Guardian Angels... Even the names of other people's HGA :heh:
Simply put, just use any hebrew name/word, if you want to go the extra mile, you can pick a name/word that have a meaning in the Gematria (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Gematria), heck if you want, you could just pick the hebrew word for 'Crow', which is [Orev]. This same Hebrew word also means “evening,” “mixture,” and “pleasant.”Orev's just perfect. :p
I'll see what else does the Gematria have.
EDIT: I'll just take Orev because I can't make anything sound proper with the Gematria...
Also:
Isara: So if Eri-chan and Orev-san are the same person, then put two together... We can call you Eri-O!
Jim: She's not a cookie...
Terminator98
2011-05-26, 11:53
You know, I'll bet if I ask that to every guy in here, 95% of the female OCs they create would probably have that same respond of 'shyly covering herself'... That's just not fun anymore
I usually either stick to chaste Mary Sues or high grade Tsunderes, and sometimes Yanderes to assortie my girl spread... also, I'm not that skillful at coming up with original girls, most of the time, it's just another mary sue.
Anyways... when you see a girl naked, there are usually 2 things that will possibly happen, either what I said earlier, or either hell is going to descend on the one that was lucky enough to see the forbidden beauty.
@Tempy: Thank you for the information. Gonna use it to redo my own Vamp's profile and perhaps do some adjustment.
SaintessHeart
2011-05-26, 11:56
Isara: So if Eri-chan and Orev-san are the same person, then put two together... We can call you Eri-O!
Jim: She's not a cookie...
Kanari : *blank look* Huh? Can she be eaten?
Ayari : *nosebleeds* Not that I mind if the eater is female.....
Kanari : Onee-chan.....you are having dirty thoughts again.
The pros and cons of Twin Phase.....:heh:
Depends... How does your girl respond when she's accidentally seen naked or in various stages of undress?
Expect awkward silence from Kirsten, followed with towel or shirt toss over the face. Later, if she is together with the guy, she will say that "Pervert!" line.
Amélie will ask what kind of business the guy have here and will threaten to denounce him to the disciplinary comitee. Convincingly. If guy happened to be in Amélie's appartment for some reason, the maid will likely be poking the back with a pointy object.
Fio would likely tackle and possibly drag the target in the shower room or her room. Whatever happen may leave that someone in bliss or traumatized.
Sanae will blush furiously and hides behind the wall, in the closet or in the bathtube and while screaming "Don't look at me, I have nothing to show!"
Naoko will politely push the mofo out of the room.
Svetlana will do like Sanae, hide and yell. Guy should expect to be later stalked around the school ground and be shot with paint round or stun rounds. For about three days.
Erin will show off, in a "Feast your eyes and burn that image in your mind" way. Then she will calmly walk toward the guy and do one of her armlocks, that hurts, implying that this pain will be the price to pay. And later, she would use that incident as blackmail material, and find a way to make the poor lad one of her "minions" as she likes to say it.
Chaos2Frozen
2011-05-26, 18:02
Orev's just perfect. :p
I'll see what else does the Gematria have.
EDIT: I'll just take Orev because I can't make anything sound proper with the Gematria...
To be honest, nothing is suppose to sound proper with the Gematria...
Also:
Isara: So if Eri-chan and Orev-san are the same person, then put two together... We can call you Eri-O!
Jim: She's not a cookie...
In the end, everything worked out heh
There's one more thing you should know...
Aleister Crowley didn’t even bother making a stance. He moved his fingers, and slowly grabbed something that cannot be seen. Like a something from a mime’s movements, like a staff that doesn’t exist slowly being stretched out. No, more correctly speaking it’s something that does not exist in this dimension. With other stimulus like the aura and atmosphere that is not categorised, it gave the illusion of a silver staff.
The Blasting Rod (http://toarumajutsunoindex.wikia.com/wiki/Blasting_Rod) (Staff of Striking/Cane of Impact).
This staff has a legend. An ancient legend that it obeyed the magician named Crowley, who is called the most evil, out of pure respect.
Anyways... when you see a girl naked, there are usually 2 things that will possibly happen, either what I said earlier, or either hell is going to descend on the one that was lucky enough to see the forbidden beauty.
Not walking in a girl naked, I would have no idea :heh:
Maybe real life isn't as bad as we think... :innocent:
Expect awkward silence from Kirsten, followed with towel or shirt toss over the face. Later, if she is together with the guy, she will say that "Pervert!" line.
That's kinda cute actually...
Sanae will blush furiously and hides behind the wall, in the closet or in the bathtube and while screaming "Don't look at me, I have nothing to show!"
Lol This one's my favorite.
Svetlana will do like Sanae, hide and yell. Guy should expect to be later stalked around the school ground and be shot with paint round or stun rounds. For about three days.
Sigh, that's why I don't like to deal with sniper girls... Even if they're cute!
MeisterBabylon
2011-05-26, 19:04
Kanari : *blank look* Huh? Can she be eaten?
Ayari : *nosebleeds* Not that I mind if the eater is female.....
Kanari : Onee-chan.....you are having dirty thoughts again.
The pros and cons of Twin Phase.....:heh:This reminds me of the times where Nemo suggests a girl repeat what she said in a suggestive manner. :uhoh:
To be honest, nothing is suppose to sound proper with the Gematria...Aiwass certainly did. :heh:
In the end, everything worked out heh
There's one more thing you should know...Oh yes I know. :nod: In fact...
Alistair: Mystery Blade
Manami: Blood Broadside
Crysanthe: Wind Fury
Isara: Plasma Lance
Merii: Shower Fatale
Erio: Blasting Rod
Seravee: Swallow Reversal
Adara: Dragon Slayer
That's what I thought would be used in a climax, if there is no choice but to glass a supernatural being. :uhoh:
MeisterBabylon
2011-05-27, 07:09
Yandere Kanojo?
Crysanthe Spyridoula
“Calypso”
Affiliation: SSR - 17
Voice: <needs suggestions>
It is said that trouble comes in twos. And indeed they do; Crysanthe from Greece is the only other Choutei ranked 17 in the school, surpassed only by Hotogi Shirayuki. In many ways, Crys and Shirayuki are similar; they are both in the Student Council Executive Committee; they do extremely well in exams; they were figures of mythical power to their peoples of origin; they both find themselves in the ‘childhood friend’ role; and they treat said childhood friend with the same amount of attention, concern and tender-loving care. After comparing notes, Jim and Kinji quickly realize that the twin typhoons may well be sharing notes... Except one thing: Crys is literally a typhoon. Like how her ancestor’s tears flooded the Nile, Crys’s sorrow, or jealousy, or any other negative emotion, brings torrent, thunder and lightning from the skies, or her own two hands. Anyone foolish (or unfortunate) to pick a fight with her will quickly find themselves battling the elements themselves. On normal days, Crys is calm, gentle, and completely dry. On these days, only when she feels down does a small storm cloud appear over her head and rain on her to comic effect. This good mood is as fickle as the weather, and can quickly degenerate into a Category 5 yanstorm complete with mini-Columnus overhead. Crys is initally part of the “Nakamura Faction” because of Jim’s involvement. Later, even as she holds on to her suspicions, Spyridoula accepts Alistair as a friend and officially joins the X-Butei.
~~~~~~
Man, this girl's creation process is as unstable as she is; none of my other ARIA OCs have received as many patches and hotfixes as Crys has. Even now, some parts are still in flux, even after I waited till I got more information about Adseard and Hotogi, and am still trawling novel translations for possible hooks and contravention. Even her voice actress kept changing, from Belldandy to BEATORICCHI to a certain light music band president to now I dunno!
I hope you guys can help me out here, both on the Choutei side and the voice-acting.
The three first of "my characters and the other OCs" batch.
I am sorry if I could not get all of them, some have posted and never come back, others tweak their plans every once in a while, etc...
You can go with the default, "Neutral, never meet each other." because it happens, or just make it up.
Kirsten Vikernes
Kirsten thinks that Preston should flirt less. She is jealous when he does that with other girls.
Kirsten and Amelie are in good terms. Kirsty sees Amelie as a respectable figure to look up to.
Fiorenza is seen as bold to the point of recklessness by Kirsten.
Kirsten thinks Sanae is a clever person.
On the other hand, she can't read into Jin's character and thinks that man is suspicious.
Kirsten have always liked to have Svetlana running on a mission with her team, the Serb have proved to be reliable.
Kirsten feels like she is learning new things everydays with Naoko. She thinks Naoko is cool.
Erin appears a bit of a haughty stuck up to Kirsten.
Kirsten thinks Minato is cool and that Preston should take some from him.
Kirsty respects Saito as Informa.
She hopes it is not her berserker fury gift, or curse, that scares Ryoushi.
Kirsty thinks Fuyumi can be a good Assault partner. The two girls can be an explosive duo, in different ways.
Ada is one of the girls who would make Kirsty questions her own sexuality.
Kirsten sees Siesta constantly surrounded by a "Mysterious Witch" aura and thinks it is totally cool.
Elise is elegant but a little cold from Kirsty's point of view.
Kirsty is constantly worried by Mara's drinking habits.
She feels relaxed around Adrian.
Charlotte is another of the Logi students that makes Kirsty wonder if every single of them are reckless.
Claus is a stereotypical German to Kirsty. Serious. all the time. Not like she would try anything to make that facade drop.
Mary is absolutely adorable to Kirsten.
Kirsten have never meet Kou. It might be better that way.
She admires Coach very much.
On the other hand, she feels overwhelmed by D-Boy's bombastic attitude overwhelming. However, he is a valuable trainer to her, considering his weapon proficiencies and her weapon choices.
Jonathan is one of those cool boys for Kirsty.
Michelle is a reliable training partner and upperclassman to Kirsty.
Kirsten thinks that Ayari needs to do something about her attitude.
She likes the twin sister, Kanari, better.
To Kirsten, Ivan is another stereotypical Logi, as if this section is a magnet for social misfits of the road.
She find a reliable occasional partner in Rachel, and a okay girl to hang with.
Doc is a respectable and reliable Medica that have tended Kirsten's wounds when the circumstances demanded it. To him, she harbors the respect a master expect from a student.
She sees Aila as the polar opposite of herself, where Kirsty is kinda shy, Aila is inspiring, where the Norwegian fights like a wild beast, Aila retains a sense of dignity. As such, admiration and envy are the natural results.
Preston Lee Whitworth
Preston likes to call Kirsten "One of his girls", but he would do anything to save her. Not just in virtue of the First Butei Law, but because of something deeper, that he denies.
He respects Amelie, even tho he can't help but revive the old rivalry between englishmen and frenchmen, typically by reminding her the french defeats against british. However, he admits that as far as this rivalry is concerned, he have concede a victory to Amélie because of how distracting she can be.
He is "partner in crime" with Fiorenza, flirting around and catching the more shy girls to get them in various costumes.
To Preston, Sanae is too much of a nerd and her interests doesn't match hers.
Preston treats Jin as a comrade, nothing more. However, Jin's skirtflipping tendencies are seen as ungentlemanly.
Preston is pretyy neutral toward Svetlana.
He would regularly discuss about what's on TV with Naoko.
When Erin scold him, Preston starts stripping her in his mind and ends up distracted from the swear fest.
He sometimes takes Minato out for some "Babe Hunt". He jokingly calls the three girls of Minato's group, "Minato's Angels", and out of respect for him, Preston would never make a serious move over any of the three.
Preston and Saito occasionally plays ping pong together. Saito occasionally joins the Babe Hunts.
Preston does bring Ryoushi in his flirt campains "to boost the boy's confidence".
In the eyes of Preston, Fuyumi sits on the line between hot and crazy, like Fio, in her own different way.
Preston happily flirt with Ada in a playful way. Ada knows it is just a game and will play along.
He likes to play chess and drink tea with Siesta.
He and Elise don't get along well.
Mara appears a little too rough for Preston's tastes.
Preston is on neutral terms with Adrian.
He commented that there is a gap as wide as the way to Mordor when it comes to describe his relationship with Charlotte.
He will never get in a back alley fight with Claus.
He is worried and uncomfortable about the way Mary handle explosives, as a result he would rather avoid her.
Preston have only heard of Kou from Kou's partners.
He only trained a few times under Coach's training. He relunctantly respect him, knowing that Coach's methods may actually save more Butei.
He is on good terms with D-Boy. Just that D-Boy reminds him who IS the boss in a master to student relationship.
Jonathan and Preston respects each other, in regard of their respective specializations.
He stays on neutral terms with Michelle out of respect for Jon.
He mentally pictures Ayari getting at it with her sister.
On the other hand, he is grossed out by Kanari's taste for yaoi.
Preston and Ivan worked a few time together. Nothing more than professional level respect.
He is kinda annoyed Rachel's evasions of his flirt attempts. But admit she is good at this.
Preston sees Doc as a good mentor, if not a little harsh toward him.
Perston counts Aila as one of his failures in flirting.
Amelie D'Artagnan
For Amélie, Kirsten is that sister figure who needs a little guidance. She knows that Kirsten's berserker rage may be very bad for everyone.
She would like Preston to flirt less around. It may be because she is harboring feeling for him since an incident kept as a secret between them.
She and Fiorenza are good friends. She would like to remind Fio that friendship between girls doesn't mean skinship.
She is also in very good term Sanae, aware that Sanae's loyalty is something to be treasured.
Jin and Amélie's relationship are mostly on a professional level.
Svetlana and Amélie have been good comrades.
She knows she can rely on Naoko and will enroll her for her mission if Naoko is available.
There seems to be a bit of tension between Erin and Amélie.
She finds Minato a bit odd, if not for his ability to turn people's abilities around.
She thinks that Saito should be a little more brave but respect him for his acting abilities and conversation skills; it had helped to stop one confrontation between Erin and herself from degenerating into a catfight.
She think that Ryoushi is moé. It's Sanae that helped her to come with that term to describe her impression of him.
She never had any problems with Fuyumi and is willing to work with her when needed.
Ada and her gets along well.
Siesta always had interesting conversation topics for Amélie. Comrades, yes. Friends, not yet.
Elise is that other french girl Amélie will be more than glad to take in for a sleepover in her apartment.
Mara and Amélie had a few spare matches. Amélie lost most of them and is more than willing to come back for another round.
She is more than willing to learn from an upperclassman such as Adrian. And the level of respect shows it.
She have been impressed by Charlotte's driving but their respective personalities makes it hard for them to get along.
D'Artagnan and Claus gets along well. They are both big on discipline and righteousness, just that their ways about it are different, Klaus being more brash, while Amélie is more calculating.
She have glomped Mary a few times. Yes, her reaction to Mary is "Aaaaw, she is adorable." And then she is reminded of reality. When Mary handles explosives and freak out everyone else.
Amélie is one of the many who never met Kou.
Her respect toward Coach is very high, especially in regard of his military background.
She enjoys training with D-Boy as well.
She is affably polite toward Jonathan.
She shares a sense of comraderie with Michelle
Ayari's behavior reminds her a bit of Erin, and that kinda rub her the wrong way. She just don't show it, only her being a little colder than usual is a hint.
However, she likes Kanari.
She have been satisfied by Ivan's job in the very few tiems they worked together.
She have tried to be friendly with Rachel, it just hard to keep her hanging around when Fiorenza is in the place.
She thinks that Doc is the man to make Preston less of a clown.
Amélie sees Aila as one of the people to take example from. Her relationship toward the scott is one of a respectful junior.
SaintessHeart
2011-05-27, 15:42
Name: Alicia Capone
Nationality: American-Italian
Age: 17
Butei Rank: A
Ancestor: Al Capone
Department: CVR
Bloodline Ability: Murderous Intent - Precision Kill
Weapon: Colt S.A.A mod .45 ACP, jeweled switchblade (belonging to her ancestor), silver-plated Tommy Gun (kept in school locker), BAR mod 7.62
Friends: Ayari/Kanari, Karla, Meikyo
Originally from the US, Alicia was an ordinary student from a Chicago middle school, where she got into a brush with the law by seriously injuring a group of local teens for trying to hit on her. As a result, her parents packed her up and sent her to Japan, enrolling her in the local Butei Academy in hopes of reining her behaviour in. However, that didn't change her personality, but her grades are above average and thus she was streamed into the Civetta class.
When Meikyo was streamed into CVR, she was unable to walk. As a result of her previous transgressions, she was often picked on by the students from other classes, no matter how the Civetta girls try to protect and help her. To make matters worse, NK has despatched agents to take her out. On one occasion, a couple of agents tried to take her out while she is out for her medical checkup, but failed and thus held hostages. Alicia then appeared and shot them out with her revolver. After that incident, they both became fast friends and she was assigned as a "protector" to the now more-vulnerable Meikyo.
Alicia is an extremely charming girl, however, her yangire personality makes her a figure of fear for her enemies. On another occasion, the car of the Tokyo mayor, who seeks to close down the Butei Academy as "it is a school of breeding violence", parked outside the school, while the mayor criticised the school for taking in Meikyo while passing by the class. Alicia then took her Thompson during lunch break and destroyed his car, which is parked near the school entrance, sparking an uproar in school. Though the nothing happened as EU and a number of prominent politicians (who hated the mayor) intervened, she was given a month of detention after school, which Meikyo visits her every day.
Alicia and Meikyo, despite being foreigners, developed a fledgling interest in the otaku culture of Japan. Alicia's dislike of the Tokyo mayor stemmed from the latter's constant censorship of "harmful material", thus making it hard for both of them to pursue her interests. Subsequently, she took an interest in airsoft weapons, and tried to get Reisen to modify an airsoft M1918 BAR into a real weapon, but was turned down as she did not have enough cash. She then vandalised his yacht with spray paint, and as revenge, Reisen fired teargas grenades into her dorm on a daily basis until Meikyo begged both sides to stop, partly because she living in the same room as Alicia too. Hence, Reisen modified the gun for her, and she agreed to pay him in instalments.
FlameSparkZ
2011-05-27, 18:14
Hmm...so...I got my hands on volume 1 of Hidan no Aria AA, and provided some new information (and characters) for the HnAverse.
So...we'll probably be using it, right? :uhoh:
*runs off with secret files*
Chaos2Frozen
2011-05-27, 18:45
A question for the gun experts; How much difference is a 9mm to a .45 pistol? I mean stuff like recoil, is the kick of a 45 that much bigger? In what case would one be preferred?
Hmm...so...I got my hands on volume 1 of Hidan no Aria AA, and provided some new information (and characters) for the HnAverse.
So...we'll probably be using it, right? :uhoh:
*runs off with secret files*
Err if you want I guess... :uhoh::heh:
MeisterBabylon
2011-05-27, 18:46
Name: Alicia Capone
Nationality: American-Italian
Age: 17
Butei Rank: A
Ancestor: Al Capone
Department: CVR
Bloodline Ability: Murderous Intent - Precision Kill
Weapon: Colt S.A.A mod .45 ACP, M37 Western Custom (Ithaca M37 crossed with a lever-action system), jeweled switchblade (belonging to her ancestor), silver-plated Tommy Gun (kept in school locker), BAR mod 7.62
Friends: Ayari/Kanari, Karla, Meikyo
Originally from the US, Alicia was an ordinary student from a Chicago middle school, where she got into a brush with the law by seriously injuring a group of local teens for trying to hit on her. As a result, her parents packed her up and sent her to Japan, enrolling her in the local Butei Academy in hopes of reining her behaviour in. However, that didn't change her personality, but her grades are above average and thus she was streamed into the Civetta class.
When Meikyo was streamed into CVR, she was unable to walk. As a result of her previous transgressions, she was often picked on by the students from other classes, no matter how the Civetta girls try to protect and help her. To make matters worse, NK has despatched agents to take her out. On one occasion, a couple of agents tried to take her out while she is out for her medical checkup, but failed and thus held hostages. Hitomi then appeared and shot them out with her revolver. After that incident, they both became fast friends and she was assigned as a "protector" to the now more-vulnerable Meikyo.
Alicia is an extremely charming girl, however, her yangire personality makes her a figure of fear for her enemies. On another occasion, the car of the Tokyo mayor, who seeks to close down the Butei Academy as "it is a school of breeding violence", parked outside the school, while the mayor criticised the school for taking in Meikyo while passing by the class. Alicia then took her Thompson during lunch break and destroyed his car, which is parked near the school entrance, sparking an uproar in school. Though the nothing happened as EU and a number of prominent politicians (who hated the mayor) intervened, she was given a month of detention after school, which Meikyo visits her every day.
Alicia and Meikyo, despite being foreigners, developed a fledgling interest in the otaku culture of Japan. Alicia's dislike of the Tokyo mayor stemmed from the latter's constant censorship of "harmful material", thus making it hard for both of them to pursue her interests. Subsequently, she took an interest in airsoft weapons, and tried to get Reisen to modify an airsoft M1918 BAR into a real weapon, but was turned down as she did not have enough cash. She then vandalised his yacht with spray paint, and as revenge, Reisen fired teargas grenades into her dorm on a daily basis until Meikyo begged both sides to stop, partly because she living in the same room as Alicia too. Hence, Reisen modified the gun for her, and she agreed to pay him in instalments.Are you sure this brusque lady is in the right department? :heh:
Marcus H.
2011-05-27, 19:19
Èlise: Ugh, my imagination is crafting a beautiful woman who speaks like "Give me the money or he gets it, see? Nyeh~ Bleah~"
MeisterBabylon
2011-05-27, 19:39
In other news, the author took my Tsubame Gaeshi chan away from me. You can't have 2 descendents of Sasaki Kojirou at once can you?! T_T
*orz in the corner with the affected vampire-ninja*
The next "My OCs and others' OCs" batch.
Fiorenza Diotallevi
She finds Kirsten very moé.
Fio treats Preston as equal when it comes to libido.
She is very friendly with Amélie, perhaps a little too much in the eyes of many, enough for Ayari's yuri goggles.
She is a good friend to Sanae and would regularly try to show the girl in her own special way.
She likes to call Jin her fellow pervert, even tho Jin says it is accidental.
She is okay with Svetlana.
She likes to talk with Naoko about anything, everything and nothing.
She wants to drag Erin into her bed. And that's enough to disgust Erin.
She enjoys the menacing glares from Minato's Angels when she does something as innocent as adjusting his necktie. Perhaps she does that for trolling purposes.
She and Saito had various talks about girls.
She have traumatized Ryoushi since he have walked in while she have been getting out of the shower. He have managed to escape but the next day he have found her wearing nothing but an apron in his room.
She have been called Dirty Old Man in Girl's Clothes by Fuyumi.
She have compared Ada to a peerless flower she would like to take.
Her relationship with Siesta are tense to say the least.
Fiorenza wonder why Elise tries to avoid her.
Fiorenza is in good terms with Mara, as long as alcohol is involved.
She finds Adrian a little plain.
Charlotte is someone she enjoys competing with.
Claus is too serious for her tastes.
Fiorenza's upbringing made it so she can enjoy things that go BOOM with Mary.
Fiorenza mentally pictures Kou as the stereotypical otaku, as far as the appearance goes. How wrong she is.
Fio thinks that Coach is a little uptight, she just will never say it.
She loves D-Boy's personality.
Fiorenza teases Jonathan about his relationship with Michelle.
As a result, she teases Michelle just to see that "funny tsundere act".
She trades yuri with Ayari.
And she trades yaoi Kanari. She thinks that the twins should do some twincest some day.
In Fio's opinion, Ivan is a funny Logi fellow to compete with.
She knows Rachel is kinda scared of her, but won't give up the idea of a skinship with her.
She is regularly scolded by Doc for getting reckless in her driving.
She have openly claimed that she want to take Aila to her bed. (to which people felt weirded out).
Sanae Noriaki
Sanae likes to have baths with Kirsten especially when Kirsty helps her to do her odango hair.
She thinks that Preston's flirting act is moronic.
She likes Amélie above anything else, the French girl being a big sister figure to her.
While she is in good terms with Fiorenza as far as Amdo to Logi's relationship goes, she would have liked it if Fiorenza did not try to pull her "skinship" regularly on her. Moreover Sanae gets more jealous when Fio does that to Amélie.
She sees Jin as a predator and danger to women.
Sanae acts as a professional toward Svetlana when it comes to maintenance. Otherwise their bonding don't go any further trying to teach each other swear words in their mother language.
Sanae don't feel anything negative toward Naoko. They would play some games against other over their DS.
She thinks Erin is cool but a little full of herself, also she don't like that tension between Erin and Amélie. She is responsible for one incident with Erin, where Jin eventally "saved" the bespectacled girl.
Her relationship with Minato is formal.
She thinks Saito is not as cool as Amélie
She have tried to befriend Ryoushi to see what he is made of. But no luck so far.
She have provided Fuyumi with some explosive devices. Her relationship don't go further than that.
She kinda likes Ada.
She calls Siesta an emogoth. It tells a lot about her relationship with Siesta.
She likes Elise, not to the same extent as Amélie.
She got sick when she have gotten into a drinking competition with Mara. She will never try it again.
She only knows Adrian from afar.
she seeks to pit Charlotte against Fio and another Logi in a race.
Claus kinda scares her. Well enough to get her calling him the T800.
She shares with Mary an interest for explosives, just not for the same reasons.
Whhile Sanae have never meet Kou in real life. They have done so over the internet. They regularly trolled each other, killed each other in online games and Kou resorted to petty hacking.
She tries to avoid Coach as much as possible. And will only follow his classes because Amélie ordered her.
She compared D-Boy to the sergeant from Full Metal Jacket.
She have only Jonathan met once and that was when he accidentally walked in while she was getting dressed up. From now on, she cowers behind her comrades when they meet.
She thinks Michelle is nice.
Sanae calls Ayari Kagami
As a result she calls Kanari Tsukasa. Other than that, there is not much between Sanae and the twins.
Ivan is that other Logi that she want to pit against Fio and Charlotte.
She feels kinda sorry for Rachel who is Target Locked in Fio's HUD.
She have not meet Doc very much.
She have had a close call with Aila who almost caught her in one of her "trolling acts" (read Erin part (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3633413#post3633413))
Jin Yamazaki
Jin thinks Kirsten's berserker rage is a waste of an otherwise adorable personality. He have gone as far as calling it a budding yandere.
He don't buy Preston's claim to be a gentleman pervert.
In his opinion, Amélie is trying too hard to play the aristocrat part of her. To him, Amélie should behave a little more like a normal teenager fantasizing about Brad Pitt or whoever actor girls fantasize about.
He would like to tell Fiorenza to lay off the sugar.
Sanae's little miss snarker act is more cute to Jin than anything else.
He is amused by Svetlana when she is acting like a hunter, otherwise she is a good buddy to him.
Jin and Naoko's relationship is... Normal.
He likes to tease Erin just to see that tsundere act of hers. Especially after that "little incident".
When it comes to Minato, his favorite part is "the mini harem dynamics" than anything else. He put it as "Who need to play harem games when you have Minato, his two buddies and the three girls? So many possibilities!"
He respect Saito for his "unique doctrine".
He calls Ryoushi "that guy who is like Simon in that Drill robot anime".
He have enjoyed Fuyumi's "corruption".
Ada is kinda his type of lady. He just keep his hands off her before he don't feel the need to add his brand of spice into Minato's band's already spicy dynamics.
Out of amusement, he calls Siesta that gypsie fortuneteller.
He knows Elise is kinda upset at him after one of the questionable uses of his wind powers over her during a mission.
Mara is one of the few girls on which he never have done the skirt flipping shenanigans. It's just that she is such a jolly fellow drinker that he just respects her too much for that. She calls her the most entertaining feature of Netherlands since Kung-Fu Football.
Not in bad terms with Adrian, he even calls him "One of the few modern gentlemen", and admit his nice clothing taste. Sober, not too fancy.
Charlotte is a funny girl to Jin.
Claus is boring to Jin
He says about Mary, "She is like the lost child of Alice In Wonderland's Alice and Michael Bay."
Too few people have meet Kou. Jin is no exception.
He likes the way Coach "break people to rebuild them better". He is aware that Coach can do him too.
He compares D-Boy's "loudness" to a hurricane, and hurricanes makes things more entertaining for Jin.
He have worked one or two missions with Jonathan, as a result, Jin respects that no non-sense attitude of his.
He knows why Michelle acts a little cold toward him.
Jin finds Ayari amusing, like that rebellious kitty trying claw the master's hand. Nothing more.
Kanari's scream over her flipped skirt is music to Jin's ears.
He is curious of Ivan's taste in music, so he would not mind a ride in Ivan's car once in a while.
Rachel is one of those girls upset by his skirt flipping tendencies.
Jin is on neutral terms with Doc.
Aila is one of the few people who called him out on his act toward girls. This may have been the one time he have shown embarassment.
In other news, the author took my Tsubame Gaeshi chan away from me. You can't have 2 descendents of Sasaki Kojirou at once can you?! T_T
*orz in the corner with the affected vampire-ninja*
I actually find this rule to be absurd. Genetics doesn't work that way. Perhaps the particular set of genes isn't always inherited, but many people can and do claim ancestry to a particular person in history. For example, the possible descendants of Genghis Khan are 1 in 200.
We have identified a Y-chromosomal lineage with several unusual features. It was found in 16 populations throughout a large region of Asia, stretching from the Pacific to the Caspian Sea, and was present at high frequency: ∼8% of the men in this region carry it, and it thus makes up ∼0.5% of the world total.
-- American Journal of Human Genetics Unless an ancestor line has only had one child for every generation, you're going to see a spread of genetic material. Hell, I could be descended from Genghis Khan, since my family's bloodline was from that region.
That said, I am not keen on seeing abuse of bloodlines / ancestors. You don't need to be descendant of Abdul Alhazred, Faust, or Rasputin to be unique.
MeisterBabylon
2011-05-27, 20:36
Of course, genetics don't work that way, but for purposes of character composition in a story, "The One" rule applies. In this case, her unique point was naming every move Tsubame Gaeshi, even actions that don't even remotely resemble a triple slash. Being Sasaki's descendent gives her access to that trait, and the Monohoshizao. Having a canon character who is that, AND has a unique sword, ruins the setup.
But I've already gotten around that; Blanche d'Arquien calls everything Tsubame Gaeshi, except does not know how to use the true Tsubame Gaeshi, and has no Monohoshizao. As a vampire-ninja, I forgot that her ultimate playstyle is that of a bard. :heh:
So the voluptious vampire-ninja, weaboo, occult expert, Countess d'Arquien and her trusty lefty bass-axe. No further conflicts.
I'm only lacking red armor here...
Of course, genetics don't work that way, but for purposes of character composition in a story, "The One" rule applies. In this case, her unique point was naming every move Tsubame Gaeshi, even actions that don't even remotely resemble a triple slash. Being Sasaki's descendent gives her access to that trait, and the Monohoshizao. Having a canon character who is that, AND has a unique sword, ruins the setup.
But I've already gotten around that; Blanche d'Arquien calls everything Tsubame Gaeshi, except does not know how to use the true Tsubame Gaeshi, and has no Monohoshizao. As a vampire-ninja, I forgot that her ultimate playstyle is that of a bard. :heh:
So the voluptious vampire-ninja, weaboo, occult expert, Countess d'Arquien and her trusty lefty bass-axe. No further conflicts.
I'm only lacking red armor here...
Or, you could, you know, be creative and make an actual Original Character rather than ports and combinations of existing characters from other anime.
MeisterBabylon
2011-05-27, 22:50
Come on let me have my post rug-from-under-feet wallowing in peace and I'll get back to serious OCing after that. :p
SaintessHeart
2011-05-28, 00:15
Are you sure this brusque lady is in the right department? :heh:
Al Capone, like most crime bosses, are able to command their followers because of their charisma. Those who are immune to their charm, suddenly gain a whole lot of enemies.
So, yeah. :heh: It gives us a new enemy to deal with anyway, namely the Tokyo mayor who is actually working for international organised crime and abusing his position. What nobody knows is that he actually rigged votes through multiple underground elements to stay in power.
Ayari/Kanari have indirect blood-ties to organised crime anyway, while Reisen used to work for them. The mayor could make a great ultimate boss. :D
Reisen : You could pawn that switchblade of yours to me as payment.
Alicia : NO! It is my family heirloom!
Reisen : Think about it! If you do that, I'll modify any weapon you want! Heck, I'll even throw in top-grade accessories for free!
Alicia : How much is that blade worth anyway?
Reisen : It is worth USD$5,000,000 in your ancestor's time. Add in inflation, the breaking of the Bretton Woods, revaluation of currency.......
Alicia : *jaw drops*
FlameSparkZ
2011-05-28, 04:04
Err if you want I guess... :uhoh::heh:
It's not a matter of wanting or not...just sharing what I know (and some might already know), and also because of the Amica system.
So, I'll keep it in spoiler tags...
The story starts a few days before Aria saves Kinji from the bike-jacking. And fills in "gaps" in the original Hidan no Aria...kinda like a well thought fanfic :heh:
Anyway, it's about a 1st year E Rank Assault Butei called Mamiya Akari who admires Aria and wants to pair with her through the Amica system.
But she's clumsy in whatever she does and is even teased by her classmate about even thinking of pairing with Aria.
Still, Aria gives Akari a chance at it, as she did with the previous 20 girls who wanted to be Amica with her. All Akari has to do is take a star shaped emblem from under Aria's uniform within 30 minutes, easier said than done :heh:
Because of the huge skill gap between them, Aria easily counters any attempts from Akari.
With still 25 minutes to go, Aria starts a game of tag, making Akari follow her around town until they get involved in an incident (even so, the time limit won't be suspended).
Aria quickly solves the incident with help of Akari and resume the test with 1 minute left...Akari has no choice but to resort to her trump card and asks Aria to hit her. And in that split second, she takes the emblem from Aria...with 1 second to spare.
...And so starts Akari's life as Aria's Amica. But she'll soon find out that there's more to Amica than to just pair up :heh:
Mamiya Akari: The main character in AA. Due to something that happened to her in the past, she has a strong desire to become stronger. As mentioned above, she admires Aria and becomes her Amica.
Akari is a Rank E Assault Butei that uses a 9mm micro Uzi and a knife.
Although clumsy, she's a cheerful girl that doesn't give up even if she's scared or the odds are against her. When in a pinch, she has good reflexes and reaction time.
Her redeeming skills are sewing (actually, she put together the paraglider Aria used to save Kinji from the bike-jack), and the technique she used to take the star emblem from Aria.
It's later revealed by Fuuma Hina (http://hidannoaria.wikia.com/wiki/Fuuma_Hina) that the technique is called Tobiugachi, a ninja assassination skill capable of removing the opponents eyeballs or organs using only one's bare hands :twitch:
Sasaki Shino:
1st year Inquesta, Akari's classmate
Descendant of the (somewhat) famous Sasaki Kojiro. Her specialty...as you might have guessed, is Tsubame Gaeshi. And she can even use it with swords of different lengths.
She's from a rich family and lives in a mansion (with two maids) instead of the Butei dorms.
Akari was the first friend she made and since then she became secretly obsessed with her to the point of making an "Akari Box" filled with pictures of her and even an Akari plushie :heh:
After Akari becomes Aria's Amica, her conversations become mostly about Aria and how they are now living together...which makes Shino think that Aria stole her friend from her.
Being Inquesta, she investigated Aria and saw that she couldn't possible beat her, so she exploits a certain rule in the Amica system to "persuade" Akari to break up with Aria.
Akari manages to defeat Shino, and after reaffirming their friendship, Shino forms a Amica contract with a yet unknown 2nd year, and asks Akari to pair up with her whenever they are free :heh:
Hino Raika:
1st year Assault, Akari's classmate.
At the moment, not much is known about her, except that she's a bit perverted and likes to harass Akari :heh:
A contract system in Butei Academy that allows 1st years to train under the guidance of 2nd and 3rd years (aka "senpai") and become sisters (I'm not sure, but it probably applies to males as well, except they become brothers :heh:).
The Senpai will then be in charge of looking after her "younger sister" and train her. In turn, the younger sister will support her older sister in whatever way she can (like when Akari put together the paraglider for Aria)
Any 1st year can apply for Amica, but must first fill out an application form and send it, then it's up to the Senpai to decide if they accept or not.
If accepted, a Master will supervise the admission test. But in Akari's case, Aria used the "Emblem" rule (for Assault Butei) and she herself was the supervisor.
As mentioned in the synopsis, Akari's test consisted of taking an emblem from under Aria's uniform within the 30 minute time limit.
If the 1st year fails the test, they can't apply for the same Senpai.
The 1st year has to pass the test on his/her own, it is against the rules to get help from others.
After passing the test, Amica start living together in the same room (As expected from Aria, she has a VIP room all for herself >_> ), and may even share secrets (she tells Akari about her being the 4th Holmes).
There is also the "Three Days Cancel" rule (which Shino exploits) that cancels the Amica contract if the 1st year is defeated (or her older sister fails to protect her) within the 72 hours after it was approved by a Master.
The result is the same as failing the admission test, the 1st year will not be able to become Amica with the same Senpai.
Well, that's what I was able to figure out of the raws :heh:
tsunade666
2011-05-28, 04:59
It's not a matter of wanting or not...just sharing what I know (and some might already know), and also because of the Amica system.
So, I'll keep it in spoiler tags...
A contract system in Butei Academy that allows 1st years to train under the guidance of 2nd and 3rd years (aka "senpai") and become sisters (I'm not sure, but it probably applies to males as well, except they become brothers :heh:).
The Senpai will then be in charge of looking after her "younger sister" and train her. In turn, the younger sister will support her older sister in whatever way she can (like when Akari put together the paraglider for Aria)
Any 1st year can apply for Amica, but must first fill out an application form and send it, then it's up to the Senpai to decide if they accept or not.
If accepted, a Master will supervise the admission test. But in Akari's case, Aria used the "Emblem" rule (for Assault Butei) and she herself was the supervisor.
As mentioned in the synopsis, Akari's test consisted of taking an emblem from under Aria's uniform within the 30 minute time limit.
If the 1st year fails the test, they can't apply for the same Senpai.
The 1st year has to pass the test on his/her own, it is against the rules to get help from others.
After passing the test, Amica start living together in the same room (As expected from Aria, she has a VIP room all for herself >_> ), and may even share secrets (she tells Akari about her being the 4th Holmes).
There is also the "Three Days Cancel" rule (which Shino exploits) that cancels the Amica contract if the 1st year is defeated (or her older sister fails to protect her) within the 72 hours after it was approved by a Master.
The result is the same as failing the admission test, the 1st year will not be able to become Amica with the same Senpai.
Well, that's what I was able to figure out of the raws :heh:
Well for Amica system it can be from both girls or both boys or a girl and boy pair up because Fuuma and Kinji are pair up in Amica system
FlameSparkZ
2011-05-28, 05:14
Well for Amica system it can be from both girls or both boys or a girl and boy pair up because Fuuma and Kinji are pair up in Amica system
I see...I should really go read the novel :heh:
Living life on the fast lane.
http://img803.imageshack.us/img803/8610/7702823.th.jpg (http://img803.imageshack.us/i/7702823.jpg/)
Name: Yukio Yamakawa @ Derek Yamakawa
Age: 16 (turning 17 this year)
Gender: Male
Date of Birth: TBA
Nationality: Japan
Class: 2nd Year
Division: Logi (Informa as elective)
Butei Rank: B (Potentially A, but held back due to machinery of choice)
Ancestry: Saigō Takamori
Equipment: UZI pistol (http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v606/kct/Handguns/DSC01117.jpg), throwing knives (http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v606/kct/Weapons/1096413425_4239366412_full.jpg), katana (http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v606/kct/Weapons/js-844bk_2.jpg)
Other Info:
Height: 183cm
Weight: 75kg
Build: Athletic, slightly muscular
Vitals: N/A
Eyes: Dark brown
Hair: Black
Hair Style: Short
Facial Features: Typical of Japanese males
C.V.: Tomokazu Seki
Background:
Coming from the home of liberty, Yukio is a Japanese born to parents with mixed ethnicity. His parents work as expatriates in the United States, meant that he spent most of his life being raised in one of the cities. While his childhood is nothing loud to begin with, having experience the hoo-haa that is called motor racing and the subsequent exposure brought out an interest in motor racing within him. Getting a something with a large engine has always been something ingrained with him because of their massive cult status in the United States, and that resulted in a rather outrageous V8-powered Impala sent his way because somehow it needed the power to move the massive weight of the large car around.
Of course, that also placed him in the other side of the law with the constant wild burnouts and other shenanigans he and his band of hoons constantly perform in quiet neighbourhoods. Still, the authorities took notice of his "potential" to be a rather useful asset to the local police force, probably because besides the wild bouts of playing with traffic laws, Yukio has had time spent in local race tracks with the very same car, which came off as an irony of sorts. Siding up with the law enforcement is a good idea when having the car crushed under anti-hoon laws AND time being re-educated seems like the other available choice, and he decided to take that up since free track time is supposed to be one of the "privileges" he was given so that he can continue driving.
The program would see him being sent to Japan, supposedly because the folks felt that there's a need for him to learn the finer points of cornering. Still it wasn't so bad of a deal, considering that Yukio thinks of Japan as some "Mecca of car culture" besides the United States and parts of Europe. They expected him to go wild, and...go wild he did.
In addition to his madness behind the steering wheel of a car, Yukio is quite aware of his ancestry, tracing to one of the major figures in the beginning of the Meiji era...one that is both respected and vilified in history. Because of this, he took up lessons in fighting the Japanese way, especially those that involves using a Japanese weapon, like kendo. He considers all that as a way for him to remember his Japanese roots without forgetting them.
It was not immediately known why he took up Informa as an elective, although recently Yukio has shown himself to be quite good at looking up information and using them.
Personality:
An easy-going guy, like many other budding racers that lie within Logi, Yukio is one that isn’t afraid of making challenges, or being challenged, when it comes to breaking the speed limit at the ground level. It was those stop-light challenges that often got him into the hot soup with the authorities, although sometimes his level of dedication to the art of motor racing borders on “insanity”. Although he presented an image of a reckless driver, he's surprisingly precise handler behind the wheel, due to his experience from race courses.
He’s also rather keen on making a fool out of females because “it is supposedly fun watching them getting really flustered”. However, he’s the type that is very selective of his victims, often picking those that he thinks deserving the attention.
Abilities and Skills:
Behind the wheel, Yukio would tune his driving style based on the situation in hand, be it either using the “slow is smooth, smooth is fast” mantra adopted by racers, or perform wild bouts of drifting/oversteering if he is the one being chased. Unlike some of the others, Yukio isn’t afraid of making jumps or wheel-hopping his way through, although he claims that he is no “Ayrton Senna behind the wheel of a Civic”. Adopted driving techniques used by professional racers due to his track experience.
His slightly “unconventional” upbringing means that Yukio uses a measure of street smarts to bring the advantage to himself, relying on a combination of street fighting skills and martial arts that he have learned. Prefers to use drive-bys to gun people down if needed, although he can make short work with the throwing knives for the times where there is a need to really hurt someone without making too much noise. The katana is reserved for those times when the opponent wields a sword.
Facts:
* Speaks English with a clear-cut American slang due to his time spent in the Unites States. However, he speaks Japanese well, considering that he converses with his family in the said language on a daily basis.
* Dabbles with anything that involves the “gangsta” culture, like “Boyz n the Hood”, and music by rappers like Dr. Dre and Snoop Dogg. Also watches mainstream American shows like CSI and House on a regular basis.
* Drives a Holden Commodore SS (http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v606/kct/Cars/DSC00795.jpg), although he would often use other vehicles, such as a Mitsubishi Pajero (http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v606/kct/Cars/PajeroNs01.jpg) SUV for transportation. In addition to this, he is also capable of flying helicopters (he prefers Hueys) and driving boats. He chooses not to bring the 1996 Chevrolet Impala SS over because of its apparent value, although he owns and rides a modified Suzuki (http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v606/kct/Bikes/p1000800kh7.jpg)GSX-R (http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v606/kct/Bikes/p1000798mm5.jpg)1000 (http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v606/kct/Bikes/p1000818uq3.jpg) literbike as transportation.
* Often calls Fiorenza Diotallevi "big sista", considering both of them pretty much came off the same program to “retrain” former hoons and street racers into useful assets. Yes, he thinks she’s hot too.
* Considers himself by far and by large to be a "car culture" guy, not set to any particular style or location. Said to have many links in the street racing world.
* Spends his free time on track days to finetune his handling of the car, although there are rumours that he also took to the mountain passes on a regular basis to improve his chances against nimbler cars with an entirely another car that is specifically used for non-Butei work.
* Despite being thought of as one of the speed-mad Logi idiots, his delinquent-esque appearance garnered him some fangirls.
* Currently works part-time at a company specializing with modification of cars for various purposes, be it circuit, rally or drifting.
* He would often modify bikes for Butei students, often working with some of the Logi folks (including Mutou) to come up with the most insane café racer (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Caf%C3%A9_racer) or streetfighter (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Streetfighter).
* Shares the same opinion with Yves Brunet regarding “The Last Samurai”, and thinks that “A Few Good Men” is a better watch.
Icy.Tear
2011-05-28, 06:19
Fuuma and Kinji are amica? Where does it say that?
tsunade666
2011-05-28, 08:16
I read it in the LN thread. Isn't that the case? I can't read the vol 1 so I'm not sure.
But I've already gotten around that; Blanche d'Arquien calls everything Tsubame Gaeshi, except does not know how to use the true Tsubame Gaeshi, and has no Monohoshizao. As a vampire-ninja, I forgot that her ultimate playstyle is that of a bard. :heh:
So the voluptious vampire-ninja, weaboo, occult expert, Countess d'Arquien and her trusty lefty bass-axe. No further conflicts.
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I think you are trying way too hard to cram as much fetishes or moé points into one single character as possible to make them "perky", to the point they feels "forced". Moreover some of your characters will soon get called out on being ports of characters from existing series (Erio from Denpa Onna anyone?).
If you have looked a the Aria cast so far, it's actually one of the more conservatives around, where the most outlandish element is a vampire.
from the spoilers FlameZ have been flinging around in IRC, that vamp is closer to what we seen in the Blood franchise than Anne Rice or Hellsing.
And in the batch of OCs we have right here and now, Mara is the more outlandish and yet reasonably stays rather conservative. The keywords being conservative and reasonable. Sometimes, take a step back, look at the bigger picture and ask yourself if you have gone overboard or not.
PS: I can't help but notice that this whole "conservative" mindset eventually dictated my choice of pictures for OCs.
PPS: And last night have raped my mind with three more OC ideas, including an old guy working as weaponsmith master in Amdo, likely a friend for Coach and D-Boy, a forensic girl as the local shrinking violet and a muslim girl Butei who actually might be one of the less conservative of my bunch. I need to meditate more on them.
PPPS: I dig that Sakaki Kojiro's descendant in the Aria manga. Rich girl + long dark hair + pantyhose + stalker tendencies, that is win.
Icy.Tear
2011-05-28, 09:52
I read it in the LN thread. Isn't that the case? I can't read the vol 1 so I'm not sure.
Aria hires Fuuma to find out about Akari's technique: Tobiugachi, translates roughly to Kite Pierce, a ninja technique used to extract the opponent's eyeballs or organs.
SaintessHeart
2011-05-28, 12:08
More swapping :
Name: Karla Bidan
Nationality: German-Korean
Age: 24
Butei Rank: Maintenance Engineer E-2
Ancestor: Gerhard Barkhorn
Department: Logi
Bloodline Ability: Pilot any aircraft or robot by instinct. Horrendous with land vehicles.
Weapons: Baton, Glock 26
Friends: Ayari/Kanari's parents - One of the only few who knew about Ayari/Kanari's true background, Reisen
Background : A former student from the German Butei Academy, she was almost granted a scholarship into the Luftwaffe but it was retracted when she was convicted for dangerous driving during her driving test, running the car through a lamppost and almost severing the car into half. Nonetheless, she was the school's top aircraft pilot and graduated from the academy with honors, therefore the school attached her to the Japanese Butei Academy. The academy was skeptical of her skills, so she was assigned as a second-level engineer.
Initially innocent, she was thrust into the underworld and conspiracies after the Unamichi twins were suddenly deposited on her doorstep with a letter simply bearing the words "Take care of them. Please." in familiar handwriting, and 10 million euros deposited into her bank account. She had been the unofficial guardian of the twins for four years since she arrived in Japan.
And a bad guy :
Name: Kintaro Izahara
Nationality: Japanese
Age: 80
Bloodline Ability: Mock Talk - able to make even the wrongest things sound right
Weapons: None
Friends: Unknown
Background : The mayor of Tokyo, Izahara is known to be a caustic speaker, however he still gets to keep his seat in the Diet, though there are rumours that he was placed there to protect the interests of certain people.
Despite making enemies with the powerful EU and a couple of Yakuza syndicates, Izahara stays relatively safe. It is said that the Japanese Internal Security Agency echelon keeps him there to draw out spies from EU working within the ranks of the Japanese government, as well as to purge any undesirable interests to Japan's sovereignty. However, unbeknownst to them, Izahara also works with certain countries around the world, turning a blind eye to drug-trafficking, racketeering and prostitution on the grounds of Tokyo. Despite the long reaching arm of the police and Butei, the appearance of North Korean agents, Golden Triangle drug dealers and other interest groups speaks lengths about the mayor possibly having a hand in it. As EU is currently tied up in the hotspots around the world, and the Butei Academy refusing to risk students doing these missions*, there are no incriminating evidence.
However, with the arrival of highly determined first-years, a foreign pilot with ties to one of Izahara's indirect victims, and a highly resourceful "fugitive" seeking vengeance from the Izahara for unknown reasons, his days are slowly numbered.
* - Known as -/X and 0/A missions, namely deniable data-gathering and forcible apprehension (a.k.a kidnapping) cum high-risk rescues respectively. To date, only two graduates within Tokyo Butei Academy have conducted these missions, and both died shortly after, with one girl from CVR repeatedly raped by her captors before escaping and dying from exhaustion, and an Assault top male student suffering multiple bullet wounds before bleeding to death during extraction, unconscious captive in hand.
According to a few psychics at SSR, as well as Amdo students who have interacted with Reisen for spare parts, there are some possible hints that Reisen had conducted multiple 0/A missions and couple of gruesome -/X which involves retrieving heads of dead people for memory engram studies, due to his mysterious but vast knowledge of how Buteis operate and how EU functions. However, since he spent 3-4 years doing deniable operations around the world, firstly for the Metro government, then for many interest groups around the world, it is hard to extract useful information from his potpourri memories even through psychic mind-reading of the SSR.
I'd suggest you to tweak your villain a bit. The mayor himself is... a bit too much in my opinion. Perhaps a mere politician seeking the top seat, or a corporate may do. You can even keep the yakuza connection.
Icy.Tear
2011-05-28, 12:18
What does "Maintenance Engineer E-2" mean?
Specifically, the E-2. 2nd level engineer?
SaintessHeart
2011-05-28, 12:35
I'd suggest you to tweak your villain a bit. The mayor himself is... a bit too much in my opinion. Perhaps a mere politician seeking the top seat, or a corporate may do. You can even keep the yakuza connection.
Being a member of the Diet as a governor, there is one more place he can go upwards - Prime Minister. From there he can run all his criminal activities, plus he gets some oversight on the internal security and police, making his power-mongering schemes much easier. In essence, it sheds light on how the political espionage world works - as long as you scratch my back, I scratch yours; but that doesn't mean I am plotting against you too.
I was planning to make him a real bad boss that nobody can easily touch, thus silently hated by everyone. So bad that even the mere person would express disgust after knowing about his activities - he is supposed to be a power-monger and control freak, not a mercenary like Reisen.
But he is only a very basic template. Need suggestions for tone-downs, or evil-ups. :heh:
What does "Maintenance Engineer E-2" mean?
Specifically, the E-2. 2nd level engineer?
A second-level engineer, namely the assistant chief engineer of a department. I was using the marine industry codes - E-1 being Chief Engineer, E-3 being Senior Engineer and E-4 being Junior Engineer.
Putting her at deputy chief is a recognition of her abilities, but not trusting her enough. I wanted that effect on her character. :heh:
But he is only a very basic template. Need suggestions for tone-downs, or evil-ups. :heh:
He don't need to run a town, being a senator (or the equivalent in Japan) is enough. Just think of Palpatine in the prequel.
Addendum: Also don't you think that an exoskeleton is a bit overboard? I mean, until proved otherwise, the tech is not THAT advanced. That's certainly not Index as far as the tech is concerned.
Huh. I missed this.
A question for the gun experts; How much difference is a 9mm to a .45 pistol? I mean stuff like recoil, is the kick of a 45 that much bigger? In what case would one be preferred?
The war between the 9mm and the .45 continues to rage to this day. A .45 kicks a little harder than a 9mm, depending on the pistol you use. A lightweight, plastic construction pistol will have a stronger felt recoil compared to a heavy, all-metal one.
On a finer point, the difference between the two rounds vary depending on manufacturer, bullet weight, grain, barrel length, etc. Out of the same model pistol, generally the .45 has higher energy coming out of the barrel than a 9mm, but the 9mm travels at a higher velocity.
Personally, I prefer the .45. It's a big, fat, subsonic bullet that hits hard and leaves a nasty wound. 9mm is faster and 9mm pistols tend to have a larger magazine capacity. Ultimately, in a setting like this, and considering the knowledge / interests of the audience, the difference between the two don't really matter. Unless you want to talk shop in the story itself, the average reader will not understand the finer details and differences. Really, just pick a caliber. Both are very common and very popular -- neither would be so if they were bad bullets.
As long as you don't do something absurd like give someone a blaster that shoots rainbow beams of instant disintegration, you'll be fine.
Chaos2Frozen
2011-05-28, 18:42
So in other words, there's really not much difference? Cause I was worried that there's probably a reason all those smart police forces are using 9mm and that I was missing something :heh: And since Butei is more of a policing force and my character is using a USP.45...
So in other words, there's really not much difference? Cause I was worried that there's probably a reason all those smart police forces are using 9mm and that I was missing something :heh: And since Butei is more of a policing force and my character is using a USP.45...
You're not missing anything, because the choice of caliber is decided by what fits the common police officer the best. The Russians and a couple of former Soviet satellite states doesn't use them due to political differences (only now that they started taking up Western ammunition). Neither caliber is the most common pistol caliber in the United States at the moment (they went with an in-between solution called the .40 S&W), although the FBI HRT uses .45 pistols. The Europeans went with 9mm because they happens to have a large variety of handguns chambered in that. Some police forces around the world still uses .38 revolvers (like us, we only started replacing them with...9mm Walther P99s, yes, the very same handgun that Riko uses).
In the end, it is proper shooting techniques that deals the damage, not how large is the ammunition and so on. Ultimately you decide for yourself what you want to equip your character with, as long as it is not something that shoots lazers out of the mouth, like what Tempy said.
EDIT: Looks like my assumption about .40 was way off.
So in other words, there's really not much difference? Cause I was worried that there's probably a reason all those smart police forces are using 9mm and that I was missing something :heh: And since Butei is more of a policing force and my character is using a USP.45...
Police forces in the US use 9mm, .40 S&W, and .45 ACP. What qualities a police force looks for in an official standard issue caliber differs from state to state, and they change occasionally. NYPD once used loaded in .38 special, later moving on to the 9mm. Nowadays, most NYPD officers are issued GLOCK models chambered for .40 S&W.
So, no. It doesn't matter. This is a work of fiction, not real life. Plot armor protects the protagonists, and the bad guys shoot wildly or at solid cover rather than at the person. The lethality of the 9mm and the .45 ACP rounds are not so different that it requires mentioning. You shoot the bad guy, you hit the bad guy, the bad guy goes down. Even a .22 LR can be lethal; you just need to use it right.
MeisterBabylon
2011-05-29, 00:00
@Sakuya: Yes it is one of the more mishapen incarnations of Seravee that I entertained myself with. Twisted further by my Ion Canon moment. The final product won't even be anywhere nearly as bad.
And apologies for having to constantly update all my characters. While a lot of them are receiving the axe because of the sheer number of characters I can use from everyone else (Quade's been fired, Merii was dropped because she didn't make the moe cut, thus Adara gets her voice actor...), the fact that I think of the story and the characters as one whole set changing one affects the other. And then considering that I try to make them as appealing to myself as to everyone else... Production Hell. :heh:
At least one more problem was solved this morning. Crysanthe has got to be voiced by YUI HORIE! :hyper-^v^: My cast is turning into Dog Days!!!
Wild Goose
2011-05-29, 13:25
But he is only a very basic template. Need suggestions for tone-downs, or evil-ups. :heh:
But will you listen to the suggestions?
Well, my thoughts as they are:
1. As Sheba has said, he doesn't need to be the mayor. In fact it'd be more interesting to have a politician who's climbing the ladder and using Yakuza help to do so - there's a manga about 2 japanese kids who survive the Khmer Rouge and decide to change Japan and support each other: one guy aims on becoming Prime Minister, the other a Yakuza boss.
2. My next issue is with this:
* - Known as -/X and 0/A missions, namely deniable data-gathering and forcible apprehension (a.k.a kidnapping) cum high-risk rescues respectively. To date, only two graduates within Tokyo Butei Academy have conducted these missions, and both died shortly after, with one girl from CVR repeatedly raped by her captors before escaping and dying from exhaustion, and an Assault top male student suffering multiple bullet wounds before bleeding to death during extraction, unconscious captive in hand.
The bad guys are bad. Fine. We get that. You want to use rape as a way of showing they are bad, being that it's a special kind of evil.
The problem is that the way you're casually dropping it gives a bad taste in people's mouths. This is a touchy subject that should not be used casually merely for the sake of showing that your villians are bad guys. We get they're bad. There are lots of different ways to do it without casually tossing in a bit of Rape as Backstory for Drama.
Also, let's not forget that at the end of the day, Hidan no Aria's feel is NOT The Elite Squad[/URL] or [URL="http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Q9jvGTmYBHs"]The Elite Squad 2: Now the enemy is another one (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cb-rUfBTQ1g). The world of Hidan no Aria is not that crapsack-y or depressing.
Take Tommy Vercetti. No raping he indulges in, and yet he emerges as the ruler of Vice City's underworld through his ruthlessness.
Remember the maxim: less is more. Understate and let the audience make their judgments. Blue Bloods gives us an example in the various criminals of the week, but particularly the child kidnapper in the pilot episode. We hardly see him do anything at all, but the way the episode sets him up, the audience feels justified in cheering Danny Reagan on as he introduces the suspect to a toilet.
Or Hawaii Five-0 - Wo Fat's done some pretty bad things, and is clearly established as a bad guy, without needing to have it be mentioned that his workers rape female adversaries.
3. Exoskeleton: Not happening, not with the current level of technology. The World of Hidan no Aria has shown itself to be little different from that of this current world.
Though I wonder if I'm on ignore, given that previous statements addressed to SaintessHeart went unanswered...
Marcus H.
2011-05-29, 20:03
By the way, I'll be translating this page (http://www.tbs.co.jp/anime/aria/course/course.html) and integrating it into the Hidan no Aria Wiki.
For those who created instructors as OCs (me included = Hattori Hanzou), this might be handy.
gunblade23
2011-05-29, 22:58
It`s time for me join.
I spent 10 minutes for this..
(if you want see the update OC profile look down at my latest post)
MeisterBabylon
2011-05-29, 23:22
Spend more time on it please. And less bold and italics this time! :eyespin:
It`s time for me join.
I spent 10 minutes for this
Codename/Nickname: Stalking Bush
Real Name: Lev Petrenko
Nationality: Russian
Age: 17
Department: Snipe
Ancestor: Dimitri Petrenko( the red soldier in the game COD WAW..later K.I.A. in Black Ops)
Catch phrase(before he`s going to fire his sniper rifle): "I am bullet, my body is a gun.. No enemy escapes me"
Personality: He has a cheerful and straightforward personality, always going at his own pace.Athletic and acrobatic, he loves sports as well.
Equipment/Inventory: M40 sniper rifle
This little babushka shames Mother Russia by using capitalist pig dog Amerikan rifle. Use glorious Russian rifle like MTs-116M or SV-98. сука.
gunblade23
2011-05-29, 23:43
This little babushka shames Mother Russia by using capitalist pig dog Amerikan rifle. Use glorious Russian rifle like MTs-116M or SV-98. сука.
ooops wrong gun..I`m in a rush though..sorry
here`s the new one
FIXED Attempts(x10)
Codename/Nickname: Dark Raven
Real Name: Lev Petrenko
Nationality: Russian
Age: 17
Department: Snipe/Sniper(formerly Assault)
Ancestor: Dimitri Petrenko( the red army soldier in the game COD WAW..later K.I.A. in Black Ops)
Bloodline Ability: He inherited Dimitri`s sniper instincts.
Field Hearing- ability to locate the noise..
V.A: Junichi Suwabe
Catch phrase(before he`s about to fire his sniper rifle): "I am a bullet, my body is a gun.. No enemy escapes me"
Personality:
His personality changes.
If he is off- the job...He has a cheerful and straightforward personality, always going at his own pace.Athletic and acrobatic, he loves sports as well.He loves to sing as well.
If he is on-job...He`s dead serious, very focused, and he`s extremely good in using sniper rifle surpassing the professionals(above level). He`s more determined to finish the job.
Equipments/Inventory: MTs-116M sniper rifle, SV-98 sniper rifle( if he`s not using MTs-116M), * modified dual P-96 pistols(fully automatic,if he is engaging in close range), AK-47(he rarely uses it; he used it when he was in assault), butterfly knife(close quarter), headphone[for a colour and design: it`s all black and the earphones has a red soviet star each] ( because he needs it at all time..a handy tool for him.lessens the loudness of all types of noise),special bullets/ammo(all guns, a substitute for tranquilizer bullets. it is filled with low dosage of hallucinogenic drugs) ,suppressor( all guns), smoke grenades, rubber bullets(all guns)
*if i say dual= you use both hands; dual weapons, holding two weapons
"Silence PLEASE you dogs, I can`t concentrate here. I have P-96 in my hand!"
"What the F... You guys let him/her get away...you should not let him/her be!!"
"A True Russian uses Russian-made weapons and sometimes we use the enemy`s weapons against them "
"Hostile target Found, Aiming the hostile"
"Mission request complete! Good work comrades"
"Sniping an enemy is like playing hunt"
"If you need help, just tell me"
"Butei Law Section 9 : I`m not allowed to kill anyone.. I`ll use the safety shots and a warning shot. For the warning shot, I have to be careful WAIT a minute THE Safety shots is considered as problematic for victims..I`m not going to use my gun to shut them up.. instead, I`ll punch their face not really hard though."
"I am a bullet, my body is a gun.. No enemy escapes me"
"Comrades capture/arrest them.. Just in case,I`m going to stop the hostile running away if they`re gonna run with their cowardly lives by shooting them"[he`s gonna use the tranquilizer bullet...if not tranquilizer bullet,he`s gonna use the special bullet instead ]"
*Bold- he usually says that everytime
MeisterBabylon
2011-05-30, 00:02
Don't ignore me, little Russian! :heh:
gunblade23
2011-05-30, 00:25
@MeisterBabylon : hey..that`s my line !! :heh:
BUT I`m supposed to say this : "Don`t ignore me dogs!"
lol :heh:
So girlie, what can you do in this situation?
"Sing..."
Sing? what kind of... hey guys, she's going to sing our requiem.
"Yes... sing your Requiem I will."
Revvy E. Telia (https://docs.google.com/document/d/1FyO3Uh9O0GFqWB3S6suS22j0XRJWhPLuU4SWigneyWM/edit?hl=en_US&authkey=CO781pQO)
gunblade23
2011-05-30, 06:34
Someone did use the GIMP for this
I`m doing it too...
Lev: I love to hear her singing but the thing is..I hate to say this, hearing this one might kill me..according to the info that I gathered, if she sing any song, it will have a deadly effect on those who hear it.. Lock and load.
*Loads MTs-116M sniper rifle*head set on*
Lev: A soldier is always prepared for any situation like this one. For safety,I have to spread the word.
Wild Goose
2011-05-30, 10:37
ooops wrong gun..I`m in a rush though..sorry
here`s the new one
UPDATE
Need A SNIPER WHO`S DESCENDED FROM A VETERAN?HERE HE IS, WAITING FOR YOU
Enough shouting.
I won't comment on his ancestry, except to say that who knows, his ancestor might have shaken hands with Jon's grandfather.
Codename/Nickname: Dark Raven
Real Name: Lev Petrenko
Nationality: Russian
Age: 17
Department: Snipe/Sniper(ex-Assault)
Ancestor: Dimitri Petrenko( the red army soldier in the game COD WAW..later K.I.A. in Black Ops)
Bloodline Ability: He inherited Dimitri`s sniper instincts.
Field Vision- ability to locate the noise..
Catch phrase(before he`s about to fire his sniper rifle): "I am a bullet, my body is a gun.. No enemy escapes me"
Personality: He has a cheerful and straightforward personality, always going at his own pace.Athletic and acrobatic, he loves sports as well.He loves to sing as well.
Equipments/Inventory: MTs-116M sniper rifle, SV-98 sniper rifle( if he`s not using MTs-116M), * modified dual P-96 pistols(fully automatic,if he is engaging in close range), AK-47(he rarely uses it), butterfly knife, headphone[for a colour and design: it`s all black and the earphones has a red soviet star each] ( because he needs it at all time..a handy tool for him.blocks the loud gun shots)
"SILENCE PLEASE YOU DOGS I CAN`T CONCENTRATE HERE!!! I have P-96 in my hand!"
"WHAT THE F... YOU GUYS LET HIM/HER GET AWAY... YOU SHOULDN`T GIVE HIM/HER OPPORTUNITY!!DON`t LET HIM GET AWAY!"
"A TRUE RUSSIAN USES RUSSIAN-MADE WEAPONS..SOMETIMES WE USE THE ENEMY`S WEAPONS AGAINST THEM "
"HOSTILE DOG SPOTTED!, FIRING FOR EFFECT!"
"MISSION REQUEST COMPLETE! H00-RAH!!!!!!(SORRY IF I MADE A MISTAKE ON SPELLING IT)"
"SNIPING AN ENEMY IS LIKE PLAYING A HUNT"
"IF YOU NEED HELP , JUST CONTACT ME"
"COMRADE, I KILL COWARDS HERE..NO EXCEPTIONS!"
Alright, WTF, over. Firstly, you've made a half-crazed blood knight thrill of battle seeking sniper. No sane organisation is going to want a sniper who enjoys his work too much. Organisations employing snipers look for quiet professionals who do what has to be done, not loud blood knight thrillseeking killers. Even the great Simo Hayha and Carlos Hathcock knew when to put the rifles down and walk away.
Also, why the hell is he shouting all the time? You'd think that as Peterenko's grandson he'd be a bit like his grandfather - a quiet professional.
Also, fire for effect (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Fire_for_effect) is the proper term, and it's used by artillery and mortar crews, not snipers.
Incidentally, have you forgotten Butei Law Section Nine? Butei are NOT allowed to kill. Your OC who's very kill-happy is going to have a hard time of it.
Now, on the other hand, if he's an antagonist, then that's something else. Certain things are more forgivable in antagonists.
Also, would it kill you to write normally? Putting everything in caps and bolded italics just turns people off.
Support character #1
Because I wanted to write a old guy profile damn it.
http://img703.imageshack.us/img703/1103/kentaro.th.jpg (http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/703/kentaro.jpg/)
Name: Kentaro Murasame, nicknamed, "That Old Pervert" by many female students, "Le Vieux Pervers" by the few french female students, "The Geezer"
(theorical) VA: Kenji Utsumi (Armstrong in Full Metal Alchemist, Raoh in Fist of the North Star)
Nationality: Japanese
Age: Approaching the 90 years old age range
Butei Rank: S
Ancestor: Goro Masamune (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Masamune) from his mother's bloodline
Department: Amdo (Master specializing in weapon manufacturing)
Bloodline Ability: None
Weapon: Hammer
Friends: Doc, Coach, D-Boy
Character Quotes:
"Listen boy, you have to prove yourself worthy to be able to wield one of my weapons."
"Listen my girl, I cannot make that weapon for you. You think yourself that it had to be THAT weapon, stop being fooled by television. Let me ask, is your body made for that weapon? Is it balanced for your frail hands? And more importantly, does it represent you and what you can make with it?"
"My education is telling me that young girls should not reveal their legs that much. But my man's heart is telling me to appreciate them and enjoy the sight."
"That guy is a walking zoo, is it because they loves him so much or is it to compensate the fact that he have no woman?*" - Erin
Background:
Kentaro is born in early XXth century, in a family of weaponsmiths who had a hard time to make both ends meet after the samurai caste disappeared a while ago. However, the militaries at the top of Imperial Japan provided his family an opportunity for a slightly better life. Kentaro as a child, then teenager, have been raised with an unwavering love for metal working and weaponsmithing. But Kentaro could not escape the political context, as a result, he have been drafted and trained in the Japanese Imperial Army. He have taken part in the following conflicts. He have carried on his duty with dedication, and have done few things he is not proud of, even today. In one occasion, during a tour of duty in Malaysia, his platoon have been decimated by a commando, a ragtag of misfits from Europe, sent by the British. The battle have been fierce to the point that both sides in the skirmish have been down to their last man, the medic, a Polish, in the commando side and Kentaro himself for the Japanese side. A fight to the death have ensued. Out of ammo, they have broken their respective rifles, and Kentaro have even broken his katana. They have been so close to kill each other, but the arrival of the reinforcements have interrupted the fight and the surviving commando have managed to escape the patrol. Kentaro have continued to fight through the war and have only been stopped when his country have officially surrendered. He may have been one of the few "lucky" to have seen the war from its beginning to its end, and to have survived. He have then worked in a factory, helping his country to rebuild itself and climbed the ladder to reach a position where he could concentrate on his ancestors' trade. His love for weaponsmithing have indeed never truly died in the war, and he have used his social position to travel around the world, especially, Europe, Africa and Asia to learn about other people's ancient weaponry and try to recreate some of those weapons. Many factors have influenced this course of action. First, a respect for the other people outside Japan. Then a firm belief that those weapons were a part of one country's soul, to forget about them meaning forgetting its soul, he have believed it so; it is also possible that he have been upset when he have learned that Americans have been destroying the katana taken from the defeated soldiers under the tracks of their tanks. Finally, the international market have shown an interest in ancient weapons and have sought to collect them, Kentaro have thought that it could help to keep his family's business running. During a trip in Malaysia, he have meet the Polish commando he fought years ago. Having put the war and its grudges behind them, they have become friends and would regularly meet in the same place every two years. Kentaro have long lamented how his weapons, he likes to call them his children, doesn't have much use in a peaceful context, other than being fine pieces of collection in a private museum. But money is money, and he have a family to feed, a house rent to pay and children, then grandchildren, for who he have wanted to pay the best schools they could. First worried by the increasing crime rate, he have found a personal joy when the creation of the Butei school network have been approved. For him, it is one of the better times to be alive, and young. He have then joined the Tokyo Butei High, as a weaponsmith master, to provide those kids weapons that will allow them to protect those they love, or teach other kids his technique, so his ancestors' legacy and his could pass on. Also, it should be noted that as a result of his years as a globe trotter accumulating great knowledge about ancient weaponry, he also befriended various animals, who have followed him; those animals are two aras, one kitten and one tiger cub, he named after his ex girlfriends from that time. And regardless of the actual gender of the animals.
Personality:
Kentaro in despite of his old age is someone with an explosive enthusiasm. He loves this time and how it allows his talent and learnings to flourish, and he doesn't hesitate to show off his creations to the students who drops by his workshop. A man of paradox, he complains about the times when women used to be frail and petite, but don't mind what the food of modern times seems to have done to them, he also complains about how men seems to be girlier as years passes, Ryoushi being the example he have in mind. He is fan of grand speech with grand, theatrical gestures that have a tendency to lead to accidental pervert moments, yes, that kind of accidental pervert. This have earned him one of his nicknames, "Ecchi Jiji". Few people visit him, and even less female students dues to his reputation. But those who does and keeps him as weapon provider have found a respectable individual, if not a little too dramatic in term of body language. In despite of his old age and his rants about the older times, he is actually enjoying the pleasures of modern age quite a lot, excepted MMOs, he just don't get the appeal. After all, why would one seek to level up enough to wield a weapon, when Kentaro can provide with a real weapon? For that, he is glad to be in Butei.
Ability:
None
Style:
Having fought during the WWII, and in despite of his old age, he is still able to give the new students a run for their money. He knows he doesn't have much time ahead of him so he will go for the fastest way to end a fight. This even means shoot to disable the opposition.
Trivia
*While he is able to forge any kind of melee weapon, his preferences goes to bladed weapons, ranging from knives to claymore, katana to a knight's long sword. He is also fine with making polearms.
*The medic commando's descendant, Doc, is also his friend as well. Coach and D-Boy also counts among his friends.
*The people who comes to his workshop for another reason than his weapons does so to visit his animal friends.
*He is shirtless most of the time, the conditions of his work dictating it.
PS: ARMSTRONG MUSCLE FLEX
*wrong, he is married and have lots of descendants.
gunblade23
2011-05-30, 12:05
Enough shouting.
I won't comment on his ancestry, except to say that who knows, his ancestor might have shaken hands with Jon's grandfather.
Alright, WTF, over. Firstly, you've made a half-crazed blood knight thrill of battle seeking sniper. No sane organisation is going to want a sniper who enjoys his work too much. Organisations employing snipers look for quiet professionals who do what has to be done, not loud blood knight thrillseeking killers. Even the great Simo Hayha and Carlos Hathcock knew when to put the rifles down and walk away.
Also, why the hell is he shouting all the time? You'd think that as Peterenko's grandson he'd be a bit like his grandfather - a quiet professional.
Also, fire for effect (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Fire_for_effect) is the proper term, and it's used by artillery and mortar crews, not snipers.
Incidentally, have you forgotten Butei Law Section Nine? Butei are NOT allowed to kill. Your OC who's very kill-happy is going to have a hard time of it.
Now, on the other hand, if he's an antagonist, then that's something else. Certain things are more forgivable in antagonists.
Also, would it kill you to write normally? Putting everything in caps and bolded italics just turns people off.
fine then.
I changed the term. He`s not an antagonist. He`s a good guy
You may check the OC profile from the previous page
Wild Goose
2011-05-30, 13:20
*facepalms*
You're completely missing the point. He's a sniper. He needs to be a quiet professional. Off the job he could be cheerful and flamboyant and all, but on the job he has to be focused and professional - not a loud-mouthed thrill seeker.
(As an aside note: Not the be a racist - god knows I'm not a whitey, even though I can speak with American and British accents IRL - but am I right in guessing that English is not your primary language? That's the only reason I can think of for why we seem to be having communication difficulties.)
And you're completely missing some other points as well... leg shots can still kill people - there's no such thing as only a flesh wound (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/OnlyAFleshWound)in real life. Shooting the legs is in fact quite problematic because if the round is powerful enough you'll blow off the limb and the target bleeds to death rapidly. (Which is what MacMillan and Price were reasonably counting on to finish off Zhakaev. Didn't take, unfortunately, due to plot armor.)
Tranq rounds... possible but not likely. You'll have to do some explaining - and also note that any round, regardless if it's lethal or supposedly less lethal like a rubber bullet, will cause fatalities if aimed at the head.
Not to say that sniping can't work - goodness knows we've got Reki, and I've got two OCs taking Snipe electives, but the mindset, that's crucial.
Basically, Lev strikes me too much as a sniper Leeroy Jenkins.
gunblade23
2011-05-30, 13:35
*facepalms*
You're completely missing the point. He's a sniper. He needs to be a quiet professional. Off the job he could be cheerful and flamboyant and all, but on the job he has to be focused and professional - not a loud-mouthed thrill seeker.
(As an aside note: Not the be a racist - god knows I'm not a whitey, even though I can speak with American and British accents IRL - but am I right in guessing that English is not your primary language? That's the only reason I can think of for why we seem to be having communication difficulties.)
And you're completely missing some other points as well... leg shots can still kill people - there's no such thing as only a flesh wound (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/OnlyAFleshWound)in real life. Shooting the legs is in fact quite problematic because if the round is powerful enough you'll blow off the limb and the target bleeds to death rapidly. (Which is what MacMillan and Price were reasonably counting on to finish off Zhakaev. Didn't take, unfortunately, due to plot armor.)
Tranq rounds... possible but not likely. You'll have to do some explaining - and also note that any round, regardless if it's lethal or supposedly less lethal like a rubber bullet, will cause fatalities if aimed at the head.
Not to say that sniping can't work - goodness knows we've got Reki, and I've got two OCs taking Snipe electives, but the mindset, that's crucial.
Basically, Lev strikes me too much as a sniper Leeroy Jenkins.
hmmm...a problem
how bout I`ll make him return to Assault Division?
it`s still counted (thanks to the inheritance )
I`m going to fix it again
Now fixed and by the way , who`s Leeroy Jenkins?
Terminator98
2011-05-30, 15:27
@Sheba: GOOD LORD am I happy that I canned my Masamune descendant... would've made two characters that would end out becoming too similar... XD Nice char there anyways, looks like a good one to introduce in my own fic at one time or the other.
Je vois que tu parles Francais... hehe... premier Frenchy que je rencontre qui est animephile sur ces forums.
ANYWAYS GENTS, massive revision to the plot and etc... for my fic, but chars are somewhat unchanged (did modify a few details, also made their profiles more summary. The fic will take care of going in deep).
Kyousuke Yamato - Mister Badass
http://i.imgur.com/YgZ3w.jpg
Name: Kyousuke
Surname: Yamato
Gender: Male
Age: 17
Height: 1.79m
Division: Assault
Butei Rank: A
Ancestor: Elisabeth Bathory
Equipment: Desert Eagle "Planet Eagle" Variant, CZ 45 "Red Custom", Multiple Stiletto Switchblades
Likes: Piano, Italian Food, Japanese Food, Women
Dislikes: Garlic, Silver, Vegetables, Spicy Food
A 2nd year student, he is extremely famous amongst his peers for having passed the entrance exam without even having had any prior Butei training. Very little is known about his past, other than he comes from Europe and is Alexandra's brother.
In truth, he is the descendant of one of history's most bloody vampires, Elizabeth Bathory. His current power levels have been diminished though, as he has abstained from drinking blood for five years. If it wasn't for that, he would be an S-Rank Butei. He is potentially one of the most powerful vampires in the world due to him absorbing blood from some of the most skilled and deadly individuals in the world.
Usually going around and giving off the airs of a male model, Kyousuke has quite a unique character. While he is always calm and composed, Kyousuke also has a certain "flirtatious" side to him, he will rarely miss occasions wherever he can tease or flirt a bit with girls. He especially derives a lot of joy from seeing his fellow female classmates blush in embarrassment. It should be noted that this is just a game though for him, and he always takes care not to go too deep within his relationships with anyone.
Kyousuke however enjoys a very different relationship with his sister. Their link is very strong, and he is always seen deeply caring for her. A lot of people like to lump in some incestuous jokes between them, seeing how well both go along.
Superhuman strength, reflexes and agility. Also possesses heightened senses. Has the power to absorb one's abilities while drinking their blood, this process also allows him to remain eternally youthful. He also has four special vampire organs that instantly regenerate all of his wounds.
Always on the forefront whenever physical intervention is needed, Kyousuke spearheads most of the assaults with Asuka backing him up. He is also viewed as the team's captain.
- His real name is Jonathan Bathory. He is the descendant of Elizabeth Bathory, the woman that bathed in the blood of a thousand virgins, and also a vampire. He ran away from his home as he did not want to become the next vampire lord of his area, and refused to drink blood (something his family did not allow). He was about to become a rampaging vampire when the Van Helsing family took him in.
- Kyousuke is currently fighting his increasing thirst for "good" blood. Not having drunk the blood of high quality individuals for the last 5 years has continuously increased his yearning to drink from a fresh human. The source of this blood is that Kyousuke possesses inside him a very high and concentrated amount of premium quality blood from select individuals, thus taxing quite a lot more Kyousuke's body.
- Supposedly extremely powerful, but having not drunk any 'good' blood for five years has taken its toll on his power levels. Kyousuke is right now at 25% of his original strength. This downgraded him to an A rank Butei, but if needed, he can perform a small burst and return to his former power levels for a small instance, although he will develop a deepening thirst for "good" blood if he ever does that.
- His silver hair comes from having drunk a small amount of blood from Alexandra when they first met.
Alexandra V.H Yamato - The Platinum Princess
http://i.imgur.com/QgDeX.jpg
Name: Alexandra
Surname: V.H. Yamato
Gender: Female
Age: 17
Height: 1.68m
Division: Inquesta
Butei Rank: A
Ancestor: Abrham Van Helsing
Equipment: Glock 34, Silver Knives, Twinbow II Crossbow
Likes: Violin, Flowers, Singing, Reading, Studying, Gardening
Dislikes: Violence, Blood, Perverts, Kyousuke's flirtatious attitude
Kyousuke's sister, she joined Tokyo Butei High alongside him and entering the school's 2nd year cycle. She is of European descent, originating from Netherlands. Her father is a local that met her mother while on a trip to Japan. Both eventually fell in love and got married. Alexandra is their first and unique child.
She never disclosed the the surname that is hidden behind the "V.H." initials, other than precising that it is her father's surname. A deeper investigation will reveal though that it is actually Van Helsing, the same surname as the famous vampire hunter's that hunted down Dracula. She thus is the inheritor of all the family's lore and knowledge about vampires. Not much is known about her mother.
Generally a sweet and kind girl, Alexandra is very much appreciated by the entirety of the school for her gentleness. This often leads her to be compared to Shirayuki, something she isn't very fond off, as even though both are on good terms, Shirayuki views Alexandra's charm and attractiveness as a threat to her's and Kinji's relationship. This often leads to Shirayuki being pushy whenever Alexandra is having a talk with Kinji. She however has another sad and depressed side of her that shows up when she is alone, although the reason why she becomes as such is still to be figured out. Alexandra is easily embarrassed and flustered by talk relating to intimate relationships or pervert subjects. This might explain why she is so annoyed by Kyousuke's flirtatious habits, although this attitude could also be read another way.
She isn't known to have any special abilities. Her physical abilities are those of a highly trained human, she is very well versed in the occult and in vampires, and she is extremely intelligent. Other than that, she has not shown any signs of possessing special abilities.
Usually trying to solve cases from gathered clues while working behind the scenes, Alexandra also doubles as the team's sniper when needed with her crossbow.
- She is actually a Dhampir as her mother is infact a Kyuuketsuki. This explains why the latter was very welcoming of Kyousuke in their family. This is also why Alexandra has unusual weird amber eyes that glow whenever she goes into her berserk rage mode, a state that confers her a lot of strengths that are usually specific to vampires.
- Alexandra might eventually kill Kyousuke unwillingly if her Dhampir side takes over her. It was originally asleep, but Kyousuke's sister recently awakened it.
- She has some affinity to magic, as she has shown Gabriel that she can manipulate light-type magic to a certain effect, although her current skills do not allow her to do anything really useful with it.
Gabriel Michaelis - God's Wrath
http://i.imgur.com/frvJM.jpg
Name: Gabriel
Surname: Michaelis
Gender: Male
Age: 18
Height: 1.78m
Division: Dagula
Butei Rank: A
Ancestor: Sebastien Michaelis
Equipment: Smith & Wesson Model 29
Likes: Sweets, Cakes, Scaring people, Sleeping, anything related to Japan
Dislikes: Otherworldly creatures, Spicy food, Working, Cowards
A French newcomer, he transfers in some time after the Butei incident in the same class as Kyousuke and Alexandra. He is in fact Alexandra's childhood friend. They were separated five years ago when Gabriel was sent to a certain school where he would follow a specific formation. Although he isn't very adamant about admitting it, Gabriel, following his ancestor's lineage, entered a special inquisitor school. Although he was very successful there, he somewhat got bored and decided to move into a much more interesting area. This was when he considered becoming a Butei in Tokyo Butei High. Indeed, he could use his skills as an inquisitor in the Dagula department, and he had quite a few qualifications for the SSR department as well. The main drive for him though was to check on Alexandra, as he hadn't seen her since a long time.
Usually quiet and silent, Gabriel is often considered weird by his peers. Indeed, he has a host of weird and spooky reactions, such as the sinister tone that always lingers in his voice, his maniacal stares and his rather evil and sadistic comments or thoughts. This side of him usually scares off a lot of people, and thus, only a very little amount of classmates actually try to approach him. Below this apparently deranged personality though, lies a loving and caring soul. He is extremely protective of his friends, and is always willing to help.
Gabriel's most peculiar ability is his 'Eye of Providence'. It is a mysterious false eye that Gabriel inserts into his empty left eye socket. When connected, it acts like a normal eye for Gabriel, but more than that, it constantly allows him to detect and identify paranormal activities and powers. He can also see through solids with this artifact, and it can also serve as a catalyst for his spells. Concerning the latter, that is Gabriel's other special ability. He has access to an entire set of exorcist spells to fight off demons and the forces of the dark.
Charged with interrogating individuals, Gabriel can also head in and support Kyousuke whenever there is a supernatural threat, seeing that he can double as an exorcist. Gabriel is also in charge of coming up with strategies alongside Alexandra.
- He has no left eye, it was gouged out when he was small so that he could fit in there the eye of providence, an artifact passed down since Sebastien Michaelis acquired it.
- He doesn't go along too well with Kyousuke some times. This is most probably because he doesn't really appreciates the fact that his best childhood friend (Alexandra) has been living with a Vampire, a supernatural being that Gabriel does not really appreciates.
- He is always seen eating sweets. Always.
Yui Miyamoto - The Sword Maiden(?)
http://i.imgur.com/yQRtD.jpg
Name: Yui
Surname: Miyamoto
Gender: Female
Age: 17
Height: 1.72m
Division: Connect
Butei Rank: A
Ancestor: Musashi Miyamoto
Equipment: Boken, Wakizashi, Nodachi, Katana, Kahr P45
Likes: Tea, Swords, Drawing, Chatting
Dislikes: Any crawling insect. Did I say any crawling insect?
Kyousuke's and Alexandra's classmate, she seems to know Alexandra in some way, as she's particularly attracted to her. It is later discovered that she is actually Alexandra's cousin, as Yui's and Alexandra's mothers are sisters.
Coming from a traditional Japanese family where there were no male descendants, she was trained in the art of the sword by her father to uphold the heritage of the Miyamoto bloodline. In this aspect, Yui is a formidable sword fighter, some say that she can even match Shirayuki if she gets serious. However, Yui dislikes sword fighting, and only resorts to it as a tool for self-defense.
Usually considered as the group's airhead, she is very often daydreaming in class. Her tongue is a bit sharper than Alexandra's as she is colder and isn't really afraid of being brutally honest at times with her interlocutors. She still is a great asset though to those that manage to befriend her, and she naturally possesses a generous personality.
Yui is extremely scared of crawling insects, and will often freak out whenever she sees one. This is usually followed by her drawing out her katana and shredding the poor thing to pieces.
Yui isn't very fond of her exceptional swordsmanship and her father's strict samurai-like behavior. She prefers to spend her time playing eroges or chatting on the internet. Hacking some websites isn't above her as well...
Exceptional skill at using Japanese swords. Is athletic and agile. Good at cooking and doing house chores. Extensive knowledge on how to handle computers and hack into databases.
Often sitting behind and acting as the operator, Yui will always provide a live feed of information, and can also hack into systems when needed to provide additional data for mission purpose. If needed, Yui can also fight.
- Yui is actually somewhat attracted to Alexandra. She tends to grope her and pamper her on her sensible parts, much to the latter's embarrassment. She also always tries to please Alexandra, and always makes it a point that she's as close to her as possible when in "tight" situations.
- As she said to Kyousuke, she never had a boyfriend, but weirdly, him and Gabriel somewhat intrigue and attract her with their peculiar personalities.
- Yui is a maniac of having everything organized. Once she sees something messy, she can't help but clean it up.
Asuka Azai - Rambo Girl
http://i.imgur.com/zUC3r.jpg
Name: Asuka
Surname: Azai
Gender: Female
Age: 16
Height: 1.62
Division: Assault
Butei Rank: A
Ancestor: Azai Nagamasa
Equipment: Steyr TMP Submachineguns, Retractable Lance, C4 Explosives
Likes: Horses and pets in general, fooling around, guns, shopping.
Dislikes: Seriousness, Bad Guys, Ghosts
Yui's longtime friend, they both grew up in Japan. In the same class as the latter, she is busy with other assignments at the beginning, thus why she didn't really have a lot of time to help Kyousuke and Alexandra in their first case. However, she later becomes an active member in the Nightray team, following Yui, and becoming very good friends with the rest of the team. Her ancestor is the famous Azai Nagamasa. Just like him, her personality seems to be a copy-paste of him, except for one aspect: her perception of the world belongs to the modern one. Thus, she will usually always use guns instead of swords or the such. She does have a retractable spear that she always keeps on her, but she by far prefers using her dual Steyr TMP submachineguns.
Brash, Hotheaded and full of energy, Asuka is "a radio powered by a nuclear powerplant" as Gabriel enjoys calling her. She LOVES to talk with others and involve herself into whatever is occurring around her. This sometimes annoy others, but Asuka is generally seen as a good and friendly girl that one can count on. She will always be enthusiastic about having to help others, and harbors a very strong justice within her. She still is a girl though, and has a somewhat sensible side below her strong personality.
Extremely good at using her firearms, she has received excellent training into wielding firearms with deadly precision. Asuka also has a fancy for explosions, and thus, has quite some knowledge about handling explosives.
While Kyousuke is a lot more discrete, Asuka always makes her entries with a big bang, by either blowing up a wall with explosives or coming in through a shattering window, etc... Due to this, the team usually prefers her to take action after Kyousuke has been discovered, or when the enemy is the less expecting it.
- Asuka has a voracious appetite. She particularly enjoys meat and fats.
- Asuka is quite genre savvy. She loves to read both American and japanese comics, and thus, will often pull out familiar names in her jokes...
- She is always rooting for the Yui x Gabriel relationship, as she finds that somehow, the two look cute when together.
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Ok, team Nightray's complete. Feedback and comments are welcome. (+ Quotes)
Next coming up is relationship with the other OCs here.
SaintessHeart
2011-05-30, 16:18
hmmm...a problem
how bout I`ll make him return to Assault Division?
it`s still counted (thanks to the inheritance )
I`m going to fix it again
Now fixed and by the way , who`s Leeroy Jenkins?
Tranquilliser rounds are dangerous to be used on humans because of the differing amounts can be administered per human body mass, health conditions, etc - Meister can vouch for me on this. You COULD substitute it with hallucinogenic drugs though, like psilocybin or LSD, both of which are considered illegal drugs but low on lethal dose ratio and dependence. Reisen gave Kanari 40. S&W caliber bullets administering small doses of LSD that are enough to disorient an enemy, making it somewhat a non-lethal weapon.
The idea behind it are the ballistic darts are mounted on low-powered cartridges, or air-powered cartridges using nitroguanidine as propellant instead of conventional explosive powder so the bullet does not penetrate, but rather, just stabs into the skin and administering the drug. Redesigning the cartridge to vent the gas so it produces something like opening a soft-drink can should be workable.
Do whatever you want with your OC man. There isn't anything wrong with using abit of imagination and reading up more on science to match to it - though it depends on how much you have read that you are able to relate to whatever he does. :heh:
MeisterBabylon
2011-05-31, 00:40
Gertrude Freiherr Immelmann
“Red Baron”
Affiliation: SSR - 15
Voice: Minako Kotobuki
What began as a means to breed the finest super-soldiers for the Third Reich, the 1st Schwarzehase has changed lieges many times, until its current incarnation under the blessings of NATO and the international Butei Corps. Each generation of eugenic pairing yielded stronger and stronger results, with the current generation deemed worthy to be called Artificial Choutei. It is from this pristine pedigree that Gertrude comes from. Descendent of many notable Luftwaffe aces from the Red Baron to Gertrude Barkhorn (making her and Karla distant cousins), Immelmann is a fearsome predator of the skies. While transports, gunships and fighters are her thing, Immelmann is not shy on the ground. Her body was bred for strength, resilience and agility, which was then enhanced with prosthetics. She cannot hurl tanks or chase cheetahs like Suzumeno Manami can, or turn invisible and teleport like Hajime Yanko, but Gertrude can still run a marathon while lugging 100kilos of gear effortlessly, or punch like a truck, or both. She oozes cold steel logic, speaks her mind as she see fit and detests artistic pursuits or excessive expressions of emotion. In spite of all this, Gertrude finds herself drawn to cute fluffy items and music, which leaves her at a loss and would do her best to keep her composure when others are around (Alone, she gives in more readily). Having taken an elective at the Stargate facility in Langrange, USA, Gertrude is the team specialist for extra-sensory perception, psychic forensics and counter-esper operations. An esper herself, she is also taking extra classes on the subject from Prof Xie. She wears a swimsuit-like garment under her Butei uniform which protects her core bionics from EMP and electronic warfare. She contested the class rep position because she believes that Alistair is unworthy of the position given her rep, and if no one volunteered the class would fall into disrepute. She is the designated pilot of Professor’s SR-79 Blackbird transport.
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A German super-soldier done right should be moe as well as cool. :)
gunblade23
2011-05-31, 01:19
I wonder what will be Lev`s reaction if he met him?
maybe it goes something like this:
Lev: A German!!! Back in World War 2,My ancestor killed a German general with a sniper rifle
;)
MeisterBabylon
2011-05-31, 01:48
I'm pretty sure its obvious that Gertrude is a She. Never mind the masculine title; its just my style.
Someone said "I dare you."
So I did.
Aila W. Cairns (https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ZwHsKswR5KO6agbuKUeO0VDL64I0cKZADZuuuH4m7U0/edit?hl=en_US&authkey=CK_NvwM#)
NorthernFallout
2011-05-31, 09:17
No idea if it really works or not. But he was fun to create and perhaps someone finds a use for him.
The Courier (https://docs.google.com/document/d/1j8ecjkDx9m55ho0Z8nxst5TAZyfqLVE90QtMCJ1IBaw/edit?hl=en_US&authkey=CNm8vZ4H)
Terminator98
2011-05-31, 10:01
Gertrude Freiherr Immelmann
“Red Baron”
Affiliation: SSR - 15
Voice: Minako Kotobuki
What began as a means to breed the finest super-soldiers for the Third Reich, the 1st Schwarzehase has changed lieges many times, until its current incarnation under the blessings of NATO and the international Butei Corps. Each generation of eugenic pairing yielded stronger and stronger results, with the current generation deemed worthy to be called Artificial Choutei. It is from this pristine pedigree that Gertrude comes from. Descendent of many notable Luftwaffe aces from the Red Baron to Gertrude Barkhorn (making her and Karla distant cousins), Immelmann is a fearsome predator of the skies. While transports, gunships and fighters are her thing, Immelmann is not shy on the ground. Her body was bred for strength, resilience and agility, which was then enhanced with prosthetics. She cannot hurl tanks or chase cheetahs like Suzumeno Manami can, or turn invisible and teleport like Hajime Yanko, but Gertrude can still run a marathon while lugging 100kilos of gear effortlessly, or punch like a truck, or both. She oozes cold steel logic, speaks her mind as she see fit and detests artistic pursuits or excessive expressions of emotion. In spite of all this, Gertrude finds herself drawn to cute fluffy items and music, which leaves her at a loss and would do her best to keep her composure when others are around (Alone, she gives in more readily). Having taken an elective at the Stargate facility in Langrange, USA, Gertrude is the team specialist for extra-sensory perception, psychic forensics and counter-esper operations. An esper herself, she is also taking extra classes on the subject from Prof Xie. She wears a swimsuit-like garment under her Butei uniform which protects her core bionics from EMP and electronic warfare. She contested the class rep position because she believes that Alistair is unworthy of the position given her rep, and if no one volunteered the class would fall into disrepute. She is the designated pilot of Professor’s SR-79 Blackbird transport.
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A German super-soldier done right should be moe as well as cool. :)
I think that Red Baron will enjoy meeting a certain antagonist/anti-protagonist that I'm making, namely, a certain descendant from Michael Wittman, the famous WWII Tank Ace.
Gertrude Freiherr Immelmann
“Red Baron”
Affiliation: SSR - 15
Voice: Minako Kotobuki
What began as a means to breed the finest super-soldiers for the Third Reich, the 1st Schwarzehase has changed lieges many times, until its current incarnation under the blessings of NATO and the international Butei Corps. Each generation of eugenic pairing yielded stronger and stronger results, with the current generation deemed worthy to be called Artificial Choutei. It is from this pristine pedigree that Gertrude comes from. Descendent of many notable Luftwaffe aces from the Red Baron to Gertrude Barkhorn (making her and Karla distant cousins), Immelmann is a fearsome predator of the skies. While transports, gunships and fighters are her thing, Immelmann is not shy on the ground. Her body was bred for strength, resilience and agility, which was then enhanced with prosthetics. She cannot hurl tanks or chase cheetahs like Suzumeno Manami can, or turn invisible and teleport like Hajime Yanko, but Gertrude can still run a marathon while lugging 100kilos of gear effortlessly, or punch like a truck, or both. She oozes cold steel logic, speaks her mind as she see fit and detests artistic pursuits or excessive expressions of emotion. In spite of all this, Gertrude finds herself drawn to cute fluffy items and music, which leaves her at a loss and would do her best to keep her composure when others are around (Alone, she gives in more readily). Having taken an elective at the Stargate facility in Langrange, USA, Gertrude is the team specialist for extra-sensory perception, psychic forensics and counter-esper operations. An esper herself, she is also taking extra classes on the subject from Prof Xie. She wears a swimsuit-like garment under her Butei uniform which protects her core bionics from EMP and electronic warfare. She contested the class rep position because she believes that Alistair is unworthy of the position given her rep, and if no one volunteered the class would fall into disrepute. She is the designated pilot of Professor’s SR-79 Blackbird transport.
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A German super-soldier done right should be moe as well as cool. :)
Can I ask you how did the scientists slip through the grasp of the Allies AND the Mossad? I mean, their experiments have likely killed jews, and the survivors are not going to forgive that. Moeover, I doubt the NATO is going to approve it, in the European Union we are fucking battling in councils to allow (ot not) genetically modified corn to grow in our fields, especially France. So let's not get started on humans.
PS: Did you even read what Tempest about trying to not blatantly port characters from other shows? Because that's Laura from IS right here.
Terminator98
2011-05-31, 11:49
It's rather hard for Meister not to port chars in, or rather, it's a bit hard to come with very original characters now days. Every char created is inspired from certain other chars, very few are those that stand out from the rest for being unique and original.
Same for me, even though I try as hard not to copy any char... I often end up giving in some traits to my character that seem to be reminiscent of characters from other animes/mangas.
but yeah.. he could try... XD
Why did she HAVE to be german btw? That's a good question... and Schwarze Regen... AHEM. (Which reminds me, I also have an IS fic to work on... back to writing)
P.S: Courier kinda reminds me of "The Transporter" movies for some reason... XD I could see him with those badass shades walking in and kicking everyone's butt or giving an extremely hot chase to a criminal while swearing everytime he gets shot at.
Also... Keroko, why does Aila make me think of "Highlander"... I dunno, might be just the feeling though, as the char herself is more sweet and less OP... I"d guess, but S Rank is quite impressive (even though Kyousuke is theoretically an S Rank+, he's just stuck with a limiter).
Also... Keroko, why does Aila make me think of "Highlander"... I dunno, might be just the feeling though, as the char herself is more sweet and less OP... I"d guess, but S Rank is quite impressive (even though Kyousuke is theoretically an S Rank+, he's just stuck with a limiter).
She's William Wallace. That explains both of your questions. :p
And if you think she's sweet and not OP... clearly I have some improvements to do.
Terminator98
2011-05-31, 14:23
She's William Wallace. That explains both of your questions. :p
And if you think she's sweet and not OP... clearly I have some improvements to do.
Might be just the sweetness, dunno, the art is good. :D
As for OPness... dunno... it's hard to gauge power levels of certain characters unless there are specific indications. We can just brag about how skilled and whatever our characters can do, but it's usually up to the author to portray power levels (even though the status of Vampire that one of my chars has makes him automatically a powerful being as he's on par with Dracula. But as I said, he's got a limiter on him).
Well it's more the impressive factor that I want to stand out, using Braveheart as a jumping point and all.
Someone said "I dare you."
So I did.
Aila W. Cairns (https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ZwHsKswR5KO6agbuKUeO0VDL64I0cKZADZuuuH4m7U0/edit?hl=en_US&authkey=CK_NvwM#)
And you have performed fine.
As a result, I added her to the "My OC toward others" posts:
Kirsty, Preston and D'Artagnan. (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3628285#post3628285)
Fio, Sanae and Jin (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3628627#post3628627)
And last batch
Naoko Kazami
She enjoys Kirsten's company.
Naoko is slightly annoyed by Preston, but she is too nice to snap over him.
She watches Amélie's struggles with Erin through yuri goggles.
Fiorenza's eagerness for girl to girl skinship scares Naoko a little.
She knows about Sanae's trolling but, as a fellow nerd, she turned her eyes away from it.
She enjoys a normal and balanced relationship with Jin.
Svetlana and Naoko are good friends.
She sees some of Erin's good sides.
She is not on bad terms with Minato.
She is more comfortable with Saito.
Ryoushi's shyness annoys her a bit.
She and Fuyumi have occasionally done some shopping together.
She mentally pictures Ada as some kind of reverse harem leader.
Siesta's stories about witchcraft scares her a bit, and the person herself intimidates Naoko about as much.
She finds Elise kinda "chic".
She is worried about Mara's liver.
Adrian have not left a lasting impression on Naoko.
The thought of a ride with Charlotte causes Naoko to cower.
Claus scares her.
Mary triggers the same kind of reaction that Naoko have toward Charlotte.
Naoko have only meet Kou over the internet, she just don't know about it.
She is fine with Coach
D-Boy is overwhelming to her.
She have good work relationship with Jonathan.
Michelle and her are respectful toward each other.
She can't seem to remember how to tell Ayari from Kanari.
She cowers when the subject of a car ride with Ivan is brought up.
She is trying to make Rachel less withdrawn.
Doc have helped her to deal with a flu, their relationship don't go higher than that.
She is on nice formal terms with Aila
Svetlana Dragovic
Svetlana think of Kirsten as a good partner.
Preston is a clown to her.
She kinda want Amélie to be in better terms with Erin.
She loves Fiorenza's energetic persona.
She enjoys learning slang words from Sanae.
She kinda wish Jin stop petting her.
She thinks of Naoko as a good friend.
She likes Erin.
Minato don't give him much of an impression.
Svetlana is neutral toward Saito.
She want to see Ryoushi as a Snipe.
Her relationship with Fuyumi is professional.
She have only heard of Ada, never having met her.
She have been introduced to Siesta from Jin, it don't go further than that.
She likes Elise a lot.
She thinks Mara may be dangerous for a team, later on.
She admires Adrian as a leader.
She think of Charlotte as a jolly girl.
she never have had problems with Claus.
Mary's knowledge of explosives amazes Svetlana, and she respects Mary for that.
She have only heard Kou but never met him.
She highly respects Coach as a Snipe.
D-Boy is a fine teacher to her.
She acts as a respectful serious junior toward Jonathan.
She almost act the same toward Michelle, just a little girlier.
She is neutral to Ayari
The same could be said about her attitude toward Kanari.
Ivan is a fine Logi to Svetlana
She likes Rachel, as a comrade.
She is ok with Doc
She can respect Aila's style of fighting on the front line, and she sees her as a worthy opponent if she ever want a clash of fighting philosophies.
Erin Dee Kirishima
Erin treats Kirsten like a little sister of some sorts, even tho Kirten is slightly taller than her.
She cannot believe that Preston is a British, from London at that. The fact that Kirsten hangs around Preston often have made Erin calling them The White Stripes.
Erin is not on good terms with Amelie. She indeed believes that Amelie's noble birth made the french girl full of herself. At one point, they have been close to go into a cat fight which was stopped by Saito. Who is lucky enough to have witnessed a symmetrical docking between two angry girls.
Fiorenza is just an idiot from Erin's point of view.
She once called Sanae Amelie's pet dog. (She don't know Sanae plotted the incident where Erin got her clothes stolen while she was showering after her club activities. It had to take Jin's help to deal with it. They never found the culprit).
That famous incident made her discover Jin's more chivalrous side. Until then she have seen him as an unsufferable skirt-flipping pervert, now she have conflicting feelings for Jin.
Svetlana and Erin are good pals.
She is also getting along well with Naoko, thinking she is well-behaved for a nerd.
She compared Minato to "a character from one of those bad harem anime".
She appreciates Saito for his conversation skills.
In Erin's eyes, Ryoushi is seen as a shy girl born in a boy's body.
She is indifferent to Fuyumi.
Erin always have a low opinion CVR students, lumping them with bimbos. However, Ada have some kind fo class and elegance that Erin have come to respect.
She likes to talk about occultism with Siesta.
She is pretty ok with Elise.
She calls Mara "One of those boozers from the Winchester."
She is fine with Adrian.
She lumps Charlotte with "the reckless idiots from Logi" like Fio.
Claus is too much focus on fight for Erin's tastes.
She can't understand Mary's love for explosives, not to mention that it makes her uncomfortable.
She have not meet Kou. And assumes he is another of those basement dwellers.
Coach may be one of the people who humbled her.
She is neutral toward D-Boy.
She is fine with Jonathan.
She is amused by Michelle's reaction toward Jonathan.
She doesn't think much about Ayari.
Likewise for Kanari, the other sister of the pair she likes to call "The Olsen Twins".
Ivan is another Logi student to her.
She have few talks with Rachel, no good and no bad impressions from her.
Doc is maybe one of the few Logi people she have some kind of respect for.
Aila is one of the people who have earned Erin's respect.
Chaos2Frozen
2011-05-31, 17:29
That's pretty throughout :heh: But I guess I would have to make my first impression of Minato with a bang soon; I've decided on the 'Silent Moe' personality for him since there's a large fanbase for those type of characters :nod: So now I have 'Silent Moe', a Tsundere, a Dojikko, a cute one, a sexy one, and a sweet one :)
MeisterBabylon
2011-05-31, 18:58
Can I ask you how did the scientists slip through the grasp of the Allies AND the Mossad? I mean, their experiments have likely killed jews, and the survivors are not going to forgive that. Moeover, I doubt the NATO is going to approve it, in the European Union we are fucking battling in councils to allow (ot not) genetically modified corn to grow in our fields, especially France. So let's not get started on humans.2 capital letters: E.U. (the criminal organization).
The rest will have to wait on the novel for more details. But I'll drop NATO and add much more negotiations.
PS: Did you even read what Tempest about trying to not blatantly port characters from other shows? Because that's Laura from IS right here.Hey now I resent this. I deliberately made her cold and logical, but not bitter. Laura is just a generic tsundere with a sad past; Gertrude is much more akin to a Vulcan, claims to be logical, but is so full of emotion that she lapses once in a while. She has NO illusion for a "Banagher Links" to come along and smash. She's not the commander of 1SH. She's still in training. And she's not in Butei for some personal vendetta.
I did not include how she looks, but I'm definitely going for the Pure Aryan colors of white-blonde + blue eyes. Plus no powered armor. She runs with a Styr AUG assault rifle and a FAMAS for a "handgun". Opts for a SIG SG-550-1 for long-range engagements. Stun baton is because its the most feasible "duuh that's hi-tach" melee weapon I could think of outside of a pilebunker.
I find more similarities between Gertrude and Space Marine #466387 than Colonel Bodewig. And I didn't even pack a chainsword.
Most of all, I feel that this is how a German super-soldier should be done.
The only link between the 2 of them is the unit, which I could simply change the name or drop it. But that would simply defeat the hinthintwink reference in the first place.
The only link between the 2 of them is the unit, which I could simply change the name or drop it. But that would simply defeat the hinthintwink reference in the first place.
Which is also the very thing that the others have been telling you not to do in the first place.
Chaos2Frozen
2011-05-31, 21:25
I don't see what the issue is with direct porting characters, i myself had brought in Ryoushi from Ookami-san and I never encountered resistance. Sure Kha could be more tactful and tasteful :p but theres no reason to condemn the idea altogether;.
Wild Goose
2011-05-31, 23:04
I'd just like to point out that Kha's missed the subtle refs in my OCs - both of them are descended from somewhat famous people (within certain circles) but the references have been quite subtle, as in descended from a Desert Rat (Jon), and descended from a sniper (Michelle), which I've reflected in the use of their rifles.
Make the refs all you want but try to be subtle about it. Operation Oyster Bay, for instance, sounds relatively harmless until you realise that Oyster Bay = Pearl Harbor, and realise what Weber was referring to.
Remember, less is more.
Someone said "I dare you."
So I did.
Aila W. Cairns (https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ZwHsKswR5KO6agbuKUeO0VDL64I0cKZADZuuuH4m7U0/edit?hl=en_US&authkey=CK_NvwM#)
This is how one should go about things, Kha.
Anyhow it's alright, and I like the tartan, though i find it interesting that it's closer to the ancient hunting tartan of the Wallace clan, rather than the red combat tartan (http://www.scotclans.com/scottish_clans/clan_wallace/tartan.html), which would have fit with the Butei skirt a bit better. :p Then again, she is hunting, just not game... hunting for targets and lo-
CRACK!
*Goose is shot.*
... anyway I like her, but the only quibble is that as per Butei regulations she needs to have a firearm of some sort, since Butei must be armed with blade and gun. Perhaps you may want her to use the SIG P232 that the Butei cannon fodder in Episode 3 use, since it's also the issue weapon for Japanese police detectives.
No idea if it really works or not. But he was fun to create and perhaps someone finds a use for him.
The Courier (https://docs.google.com/document/d/1j8ecjkDx9m55ho0Z8nxst5TAZyfqLVE90QtMCJ1IBaw/edit?hl=en_US&authkey=CNm8vZ4H)
Interesting charecter. I predict high speed chases between him and Doc.
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-01, 00:25
Hajime Yanko
“Nine-tails”
Affiliation: SSR - 14
Voice: Hikasa Yohko
The Mochizuki Institute of the Fine Arts for Girls is a fancy name for an orphanage and education facility. But it is really in the soft arts that they excel. Every child accepted is taught how to survive in the wide world, and, continuing the generations-old tradition, trained in the ways of the geisha and the chaste enlightenment of miko. Beneath that refined facade however is one of Japan’s worst kept secrets: All of these orphans are kunoichi, masters of intelligence gathering, smuggling, seduction, and, if need be, assassination. An affiliated school of Tokyo Butei, Mochigakuen has produced many confident young women who often specialize further within Butei’s many branches.
Yanko is another of these fabled girls, tall, demure and ravishly beautiful. She is a talent at ninjutsu, and is mentored part time under the tutelage of Hattori Hanzou when not at the Institute. She never seems fazed, and coolly turns down every confession with a few words of advice thrown in. She is also capable of superhuman feats, like merging into shadows, stepping through the dark and emerging from another to backstab an unwitting foe, dancing circles around an isolated enemy, replacing her body with a substitute and other things ninjas are famous for. Only a Choutei can learn these advanced skills, and as such their mastery is rare amongst the Mochizuki junoichi. However, these skills almost always require cover, shade, and are only really useful against a single target, or a few at most. Like a rogue, Yanko cannot go in guns-blazing like the other Choutei. Yanko's enthralling confidence and super-ninjaism earned her the title of Kyuubi or Nine-tails within Tokyo Butei.
The girl and Manami were friends from long ago as the werewolf would hang out at MIFA whenever the Black Pearl is docked in Tokyo Bay (Mrs Suzumeno’s alma mater is MIFA, having been in the same class as the current principal). As Yanko confesses, that cool gig was just all her years of training. The real Yanko is as about as girly and as scared as schoolgirls can ever get, the incredibly timid girl being frightened of anything from jack-in-a-boxes to cockroaches to odd things like barnacles. She is also very squeamish around matters of love and sex, and often falls victim to Nemo's innuendos. Her time at MIFA has honed her instincts to take over, and she copes by putting on an alluring mask that borders on a split personality. When there’s a need for it, she will suck it up and stalk her prey, using the methods she has sharpened close to perfection. She’s fine as long as she remains hidden. When she needs to strike, Yanko does, then quickly retreats into the shadow that is her comforter. However, she is prone to ‘gargolying’. This is explained by Manami to be ‘suddenly freezing up when the danger has passed because her body has been moving on its own but she has long fainted mentally.’ It takes a while before she ‘un-Stoneforms’, and requires her friends to keep her safe till then.
Because of her drilling in that art, Yanko is knowledgeable of toxicology. Oddly, this frightened Butei is fond of the occult, a fatal attraction almost akin to a scary-movie fanatic who scares herself to bits, picks up the pieces and go at it again. As such, Hajime is a generalist on matters of the supernatural, and provides a ‘bird’s eye view’ when involved in a case.
This kunoichi is first introduced when principal Krueger sent her to the Roswell Observatory to investigate reports of staff being abducted by supernatural forces. After Yanko and the X-Butei survive the mission, Yanko transfers into Butei Freshman Class X and officially joins the “Nakamura Faction”.
~~~~~~
Very long profile for a background character...
That leaves Adara, and thankfully, Tempy has given me the go-ahead.
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-01, 09:34
Updating Gertrude with weapons, but for now, the FAMAS that I mentioned is actually a H&K MP7 that she hides in her school bag. Sometimes she'd fit a FN P90 in there, for premeditated assault from undercover missions. Other times she has a SIG SG-550-1 long range rifle for sniping.
That wall of text could use a bit of organizing. A couple of paragraphs would make that profile much easier to read.
Anyhow it's alright, and I like the tartan, though i find it interesting that it's closer to the ancient hunting tartan of the Wallace clan, rather than the red combat tartan (http://www.scotclans.com/scottish_clans/clan_wallace/tartan.html), which would have fit with the Butei skirt a bit better. :p Then again, she is hunting, just not game... hunting for targets and lo-
CRACK!
Huh, I never knew that. *scribble scribble scribble* Useful info.
... anyway I like her, but the only quibble is that as per Butei regulations she needs to have a firearm of some sort, since Butei must be armed with blade and gun. Perhaps you may want her to use the SIG P232 that the Butei cannon fodder in Episode 3 use, since it's also the issue weapon for Japanese police detectives.
She does, a shotgun to be precise. But I've been meaning to address this, considering there are several characters that don't utilize guns, how strict is the Butei on following this rule exactly?
SaintessHeart
2011-06-01, 16:32
She does, a shotgun to be precise. But I've been meaning to address this, considering there are several characters that don't utilize guns, how strict is the Butei on following this rule exactly?
Give her a sawn-off? :heh:
Give her a sawn-off? :heh:
Keroko gave Wallace a Fabarm ultra short shotgun after Tempy's suggestion, and it computes.
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-01, 17:10
She does, a shotgun to be precise. But I've been meaning to address this, considering there are several characters that don't utilize guns, how strict is the Butei on following this rule exactly?
If you're thinking of Shiraiyuki; even she has a gun... :uhoh:
I made three more (https://docs.google.com/document/d/10IZsZRNpgdArsC-ajbR4VgK4eDU14R1lq5qIJrbdHnk/edit?hl=en_US&authkey=CLKAkIwE).
SaintessHeart
2011-06-01, 18:07
Keroko gave Wallace a Fabarm ultra short shotgun after Tempy's suggestion, and it computes.
Maybe we could modify it with a lever-action loader to make it cooler. :heh:
Why go through all the trouble when there's this (http://fc01.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2010/182/c/7/Terminator__Winchester_m1887_by_MerihemXx.jpg)?
gunblade23
2011-06-01, 20:35
Why go through all the trouble when there's this (http://fc01.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2010/182/c/7/Terminator__Winchester_m1887_by_MerihemXx.jpg)?
don`t tell me this one is model 1887 shotgun?
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-01, 23:20
That wall of text could use a bit of organizing. A couple of paragraphs would make that profile much easier to read.Done. It just got bigger and bigger as I piled more information in.
Now to start formating all the X-Butei profiles into a proper wiki article. :heh:
SaintessHeart
2011-06-02, 04:16
Why go through all the trouble when there's this (http://fc01.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2010/182/c/7/Terminator__Winchester_m1887_by_MerihemXx.jpg)?
The Fabarm holds 8 rounds if I am not wrong, while the W87 only holds 5. More rounds is always FTW. :heh:
The Fabarm holds 8 rounds if I am not wrong, while the W87 only holds 5. More rounds is always FTW. :heh:
Keroko's Wallace is using the SDASS ultra-short version, a relatively new model that's about 36cm long. It holds 5 shots, and is meant as a supplement for Wallace's sword and daggers.
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-02, 08:56
/me throws all the guns away from the Choutei.
When you can parry and reflect bullets, and your opponent is likewise as immune, the usefulness of ammunition fades... :heh:
Support character
http://img594.imageshack.us/img594/5906/yvesbrunet.th.jpg (http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/594/yvesbrunet.jpg/)
Name: Yves Brunet (Yves is pronouced iv, yes the E and S are mute).
(theorical) VA: Jun Fukuyama
Nationality: French (born in Japan)
Age: 17
Class: 2nd Year
Butei Rank: A
Ancestor: Jules Brunet (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Jules_Brunet)
Department: Assault (Dagula elective)
Bloodline Ability: None
Weapon: A katana and a Sig-Sauer SP 2022.
Friends: Kaede Fujita, Nene Otonashi and Yasmin Saif.
Character Quotes:
"It's not the blood or the homeland of my parents that matters, it is the heart and the soul that guide my sword."
Background:
Descending from the french officer who fought alongside the Shogunate troops in the 1860s, Yves' family have emigrated to Japan in the 1980s for business' reasons. Born in the 1990s, Yves is one of those french citizen who have never know their country of their parents, and could have passed for citizens of their adoptive country. As a son of expatriates, he have gained fluency over french from his parents and japanese from his schoolmates. At school, he made a lot of friends, mostly because he have brought something "exotic" about him, and have been looking like the stereotypical french that the japanese have always envisioned from animated series. As a way to adapt to the mindset of his country of adoption, he have trained in kenjutsu and iaijutsu since he have been seven years old. He have met his best friend during his training sessions, a little girl named Kaede. Some could call it fate, others would call it just a mere coincidence, but those two children have had an ancestry tracing back to people who have witnessed and participated in the end of the Edo Era, on the side of the Shogunate. Together, they would become good students in both academic and martial arts. While Kaede have stuck to a style closer to her ancestor, Yves favored a more traditional style with iaijutsu as surprise move. Together, they have witnessed the worsening crime rate and wanted to do something about it. For that reason, they have trained and taken exams to be able to join the Tokyo Butei High as soon as they have heard about it from their teacher in middle school. He have surprised students who have expected someone less adjusted to the country and would have never guessed he have lived here from his birth. As a result, he have become a sort of curiosity, neither truly French, nor truly Japanese. However, this have not stopped him from making friends drawn to that rather unusual pedigree. Among them, he could count the Amdo weaponsmith master, Kentaro Murasame, a shy girl from the forensic section named Nene and a transfer student from Brazil, of Egyptian ancestry, named Yasmin. This widening web of relationships have helped the duo to expand their possible field of operations.
Personality:
Yves may come to others as rather old-fashioned, the keyword being "rather". his mindset may have been tuned to old school chilvalry but growing up in the 20th and 21st century have made him aware that more women are able to hold on their own. Through his first year at Butei High, he have proved to be brave, merciful, standing for the weak and courteous to women. This last part could explain how Yasmin have accepted his friendship not too long after the sad conclusion of her relationship with her boyfriend.
As far as the duo is concerned, Yves is more the guy going to the frontline with bravado, to complement the pair, he have taken Dagula as other course, to help Kaede to squeeze information out of captured criminals.
Ability:
None
Style:
Compared to Kaede, Yves' fighting style is a little more traditional yet flamboyant kenjutsu, with a side of iaijutsu as a mean to surprise and catch the opponent off-guard.. The lion could be the animal that could represent him. Unlike Kaede, he is also as good with his firearm, a Sig-Sauer SP 2022.
Trivia
*He is a member of the kendo and tea ceremony clubs. He have notably meet Amélie in the tea ceremony one.
*He regularly watches jidaigeki TV series or movies. He have also used to watch series of the Metal Hero Series, recordings of the Space Sheriff Series counts in his personal collection.
*His favorite musical bands are The Pillows, Spitz and Scoobie Do (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_IAvyyX776).
*Yves don't like "The Last Samurai" movie, believing that they just should have taken the story of Jules Brunet instead of twisting it.
Author's note
I have realized that all of my male OCs are perverts, three different flavors of pervert, the gentleman (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3612129#post3612129) pervert, the troll (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3622879#post3622879)pervert and the accidental (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3631836#post3631836) pervert. I have felt the need to make a male OC that could balance it out. But just doing that would not be that. As I have browsed pixiv to find an original male that is not too bishie and not too shota, I have found that picture that have somehow inspired me. This have gone that way. So this guy is blonde and have a katana? What if he is a caucasian AND a japanophile. But I did not want to make someone who loves Japan and is turned into a joke like Sodom (http://streetfighter.wikia.com/wiki/Sodom), I wanted someone who have been integrated into the country and would be mistaken for a japanese, if not for his actual ethnicity and physical features. This is when I have remembered that the movie "The Last Samurai" have been inspired by the story of a French officer who chose to side with the Shogunate in the last war that would determine the fate of Japan, and especially the samurai caste. Then I left the rest to my imagination as I tried to make a male OC more chivalrous and more considerate to the girls than the three last ones.
Next ones in line
Kaede
http://img232.imageshack.us/img232/701/kaedeportrait.png
Nene
http://img546.imageshack.us/img546/294/neneportrait.jpg
Yasmin
http://img263.imageshack.us/img263/2685/yasminportrait.jpg
Characters so far
The thrill of OCing, I have thought to have lost it in nerdrage and frustration. Maybe because I have not joined the party that late, and am not frustrated by the developments of the fictional universe.
Kirsten Vikernes (Assault)
Preston Lee Whitworth (Medica) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3612129#post3612129)
Amélie D'Artagnan (Inquista)
Fiorenza Diotallevi (Logi)
Sanae Noriaki (Amdo) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3619064#post3619064)
Jin Yamazaki (SSR) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3622879#post3622879)
Svetlana Dragovic (Snipe) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3623641#post3623641)
Naoko Kazami (Connect) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3624161#post3624161)
Erin Dee Kirishima (Informa) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3624419#post3624419)
Kentaro Murasame (Amdo) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3631836#post3631836)
PS: I have retconned the age and school class of many OCs to match their backstories and experience. So far the only genuine noob is Kirsten.
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-02, 22:51
Which worldline am I in? Why is Sheba creating more OCs than I'll ever will in Ariaverse?! And ALL of them fit in my scheme of things perfectly?!?! :eyespin:
Terminator98
2011-06-02, 22:52
Making one's own fic? Well, now I don't have to imagine classmates... I can just borrow her OCs. XD
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-02, 22:54
...termie, its a trap. :uhoh:
EDIT: I've changed my plans around. Because of the numbers now (and yet to come) I'm dropping the non-active OCs to "recurring characters from other classes", while putting most of the active ones (save Elise) into A Certain Butei Class (No more Class X :heh:).
Also, Wolf's Eden was renamed to [EVEN] as originally intended.
More patch notes coming as the last of the X-Butei is set to be launched.
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-02, 23:54
Thanks I guess :heh: team name isnt that important to me just yet...
Damn, I wanna write a proprt introduction with Minato and Kinji, but I keep getting caught up in LA Noir :eyespin: i suppose i can pretend its for research...
Marcus H.
2011-06-03, 00:34
I just realized.
We already have Patra for Cleopatra, Shirayuki for Himiko and Jeanne d'Arc.
It's like it's trying to tell me to create a Butei that would eventually become the descendant of Homura Akemi.
@_@
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-03, 00:44
How did you figure :heh:?
btw, who is Himiko? I never got the reference.
How did you figure :heh:?
btw, who is Himiko? I never got the reference.
I'm guessing it refers to Queen Himiko, a ruler from a long long time ago (she died in 248). She ruled over an area of ancient Japan called Yamataikoku. She is believed to have communicated with the Wei kingdom of China during the Three Kingdoms period.
I just realized.
We already have Patra for Cleopatra, Shirayuki for Himiko and Jeanne d'Arc.
It's like it's trying to tell me to create a Butei that would eventually become the descendant of Homura Akemi.
@_@
Why not Sen-hime (knowing that the Tokugawa still have descendants well and alive in that time) or Oichi (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Oichi)?
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-03, 02:30
@marcus irc knows my second contribution to EVEN after Ryou is a certain Klein Bottle user. :uhoh: but you can have a crack at it instead I have enough OCs on my plate.
But yes, after Shirayuki and Jenne I made Kurisu to complete the set. Now maybe I should do a certain Heroine if you are going to Homerun... :uhoh:
gunblade23
2011-06-03, 12:01
I think I~ll be planning to create an OC which is HondaTadakatsu descendant
either good or evil
Support character - The She-Wolf
http://img94.imageshack.us/img94/8987/kaedefujita.th.png (http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/94/kaedefujita.png/)
Kaede in her Sunday's clothes
Name: Kaede Fujita nicknamed The She-Wolf of Butei
(theorical) VA: Yukana
Nationality: Japanese
Age: 17
Class: 2nd Year
Butei Rank: A
Ancestor: Goro Fujita (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sait%C5%8D_Hajime)
Department: Inquesta (Assault elective)
Bloodline Ability: Atemporal Sight
Weapon: A katana and a M1911 pistol
Friends: Yves Brunet, Nene Otonashi and Yasmin Saif.
Character Quotes:
"Hidari Katate Hira Tsuki!!!!"
Background:
As the daughter of a family of police officers, this second year student at Tokyo Butei High have enrolled in this school to follow her childhood friend, the japan-born frenchman Yves Brunet. Together, they formed a duo that have performed fine in the various missions they have taken and the fact that they are often seen together have been subject of various rumors regarding a possible romantic relationship. However, this have not stopped Kaede from getting her own faction of fans who are "moe for maidens with eyepatches", much more to her annoyance. Moreover, the spread of the information regarding Kaede's ancestry have added up to her annoyance since they are now longing to see her wearing the famous clothes worn by the Shinsengumi. Other than that, she is one swordmaiden among others like Shirayuki and Aila Wallace Cairns.
Personality:
She is usually a quiet girl, and also the more cold-blooded of the duo. She likes to take a few steps back and trying to analyze a situation to find out how to take advantage of it. The knowledge of her ancestry have made her hard-working and demanding toward herself, this makes her rather competitive with the other sword users of Butei. Kaede also knows that her nickname have been given to her because of her ancestry, rather than her own merits. It slightly annoys her but it pushes her to do her best to actually earn it.
Ability:
Taking out her eyepatch during an activity with high stress activate her own unique ability. Her brain activity speed up to the point that her subjective time slow down, this allows her to react accordingly to threats. However, she cannot maintain this state for more than thirty seconds and have to close her eye or cover it with an eyepatch again, otherwise she may start feeling lightheadness. Even after putting her eyepatch back on, the use of this ability cause a crippling headache to set in after three minutes and she have to lay down for six hours until it goes away.
Style:
Kaede's style reflects her ancestry. Like him, she is fond of thrust attacks, namely the Gatotsu, that have proved to be quite fearsome during many confrontations. Where Yves is more flamboyant and attack to overwhelm the enemy until that poor soul drop, Kaede is more into silently tread around the target to analyze him and suddenly attack at the slightest sight of a weakness, like a wolf. About the Gatotsu, whatever the technique have actually been used by the historical Saito Hajime or is an invention of mangaka is up to debate. However, this have not stopped Kaede from including it in her staple attacks.
Trivia
*She is not as fond of history drama as Yves is. Her movies and series preferences goes to action movies and shounen manga. Her favorites are Once Upon a Time in China, and One Piece.
*Her musical preferences goes for anything that sounds majestic. As a result, those preferences can range from classical music to power metal, and Queen. She says ot makes her heart burning with courage.
*She is an excellent cook and will gladly cook bento for her friend Yves.
*Speaking of food, while her ancestor is famous as a heavy drinker, Kaede is more of a sweet tooth, her favourite pastries being the taiyaki.
*She is easily scared and yet watches horror movies, all the better for her if she have Yves to cling to. She reasons that, like arsenic, fear is something she needs to take on small doses until it makes her stronger.
*She sees Shirayuki and Aila as comrades and friendly rivals. As a result, she will not miss an opportunity to challenge them to a swordfight.
Author's note
Ah Kaede, that one character is born from the conclusion that Yves have needed a friend. Then it matured, from just a friend, she have become Yves' Osananajimi and descendant of the famous Hajime Saito. In the cast of characters I have created so far, Kentaro is the one who is happily married, given his age, while Yves and Kaede are the otp of the Yves + Kaede + Nene + Yasmin group. There may be teasing from every sides but in the end, Kaede will be the one victorious, unlike the other Kaede from that other series.
Next ones in line
Nene
http://img546.imageshack.us/img546/294/neneportrait.jpg
Yasmin
http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/263/yasminportrait.jpg/
Characters so far
Kirsten Vikernes (Assault)
Preston Lee Whitworth (Medica) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3612129#post3612129)
Amelie D'Artagnan (Inquista)
Fiorenza Diotallevi (Logi)
Sanae Noriaki (Amdo) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3619064#post3619064)
Jin Yamazaki (SSR) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3622879#post3622879)
Svetlana Dragovic (Snipe) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3623641#post3623641)
Naoko Kazami (Connect) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3624161#post3624161)
Erin Dee Kirishima (Informa) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3624419#post3624419)
Kentaro Murasame (Amdo) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3631836#post3631836)
Yves Brunet (Assault) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3636594#post3636594)
So another samurai girl? Where are the others? To me Kaede is more suitable if she is from the Masamune or Yagyu bloodline due to ehr eye patch.
Looks like I better start to create my other OCs soon and update my Shuusuke Fujita before it is too late.
One thing I would like to point out as well, it will be good if we start to specify which Butei high school each OC are from. This way, we could get more diversity in the OC where not all of them from Tokyo only. We could start putting them in other countries.
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-04, 02:41
One thing I would like to point out as well, it will be good if we start to specify which Butei high school each OC are from. This way, we could get more diversity in the OC where not all of them from Tokyo only. We could start putting them in other countries.
While that is true, chances are most people would still gravitate to Tokyo; as that's where the main story takes place. And this might just be my opinion, but running a story along side the Canon Characters allow people to relate to the Original characters better, rather than some unknown person suddenly pops up from nowhere.
Aaron008R
2011-06-04, 05:50
I can't believe I'm doing this... but oh well. :eyespin:
Name: Kyouko Z. Akechi
http://i.imgur.com/7VcFWl.jpg (http://imgur.com/7VcFW)
Nicknames: Kyou-chan, Kyokkyun, Omawari-chan (Police-chan)
Gender: Female
Age: 16
Occupation: Butei High 1st year student
Butei Ranking: B
Eyes: Hazel
Hair: Brown, usually in a ponytail
Primary Department: Inquesta
Elective: Amdo
Usual wear: Butei uniform
Specialization: Criminal investigation and apprehension
Equipment:
1 modified Colt M1911 (Affectionately named the Aya Hiraga Custom by Aya Hiraga, not that Kyouko ever uses the name)
A set of jitte (http://www.samurai-swords-for-sale.com/store/images/P/jitte.jpg) Here's a wiki about them (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Jitte_%28weapon%29)
Handcuffs. LOTS of them.
Theme Song: ‘一気に決めるゼ! (- Which is Decided at a Stroke!)’
x0q70RlMyTM
Character Quote 1:
"Be good and take the rope!"
(An antiquated Japanese phrase meaning ‘be arrested’)
Background:
Kyouko is a first year Tokyo Butei High student from a wealthy family of Japanese Mystery Novel writers. Showing great athletic capability and a firm, if not readily apparent sense of justice form a young age, she took the exam as a Butei and passed with decent scores. She keeps a rather low profile at school similar to how intelligent but unpopular students would have, but seems to be a close acquaintance of Inqesta's 2nd year Riko Mine.
Her father is said to have been a famous member of the International Criminal Police Organization (INTERPOL), though she hardly ever talks about her parents.
Character Quote 2:
“Hai, goyou.” *handcuffs someone*
(“Here, you’re under arrest.”)
Personality:
Outwardly calm and levelheaded to the point of appearing apathetic, it is a very usual sight to see Kyouko yawning and looking bored from the daily school life as a Butei. It is easy to approach her but is also easy to ignore as just another student. The only people so far that are shown to be able to get on her nerves enough that she dissolves into a blushing wild-cat screaming outdated police battle cries are Riko Mine (almost everytime) and Tohyama Kinji (When they first met. No prices for guessing how Kinji was during that time.:p)
http://i.imgur.com/5CJXbl.jpg (http://imgur.com/5CJXb)
Most of the time, she is a polite student who may look just a tad bit uninterested on whoever she's talking to. Sarcastic comments and blunt corrections can be expected as well. Her speech pattern sometimes slips to old-fashioned Japanese when she gets excited, a bad habit she attributes to having watched one too many Jidai Geki shows when she was younger. She gives small smiles sparingly and to date, nobody has been able to see her laugh naturally in her class yet. The only time she was seen by the class laughing was when she’s being tickled… by Riko.
Character Quote 3:
"RIKO MINE! YOU’RE UNDER ARREST FOR ACTS OF LASCIVIOUSNESS!!!"
Abilities and fighting style:
As a 1st-year student of Inquesta, she is still learning the ropes of high-level criminal investigation. She is shown to have a lot of potential with her intuition and ability to think outside the box. She has, on occasion been able to outsmart her seniors like Riko with her intuition and 'experience with mystery novels,' as she puts it. She also took an elective course in Amdo and is so far creating variations of jittes and handcuffs.
As an individual combatant, while she is one could call a very 'standard-class' Butei, she is shown to be very capable of handling situations where a 1st year like her would usually be fumbling around with. She's a good shot and is also skilled in wielding a jitte, having broken many practice swords of fellow sparring partners. She has surprisingly high arm strength and can handle the recoil of many guns, as well as carry people heavier than her with ease. Her most remarkable talent would definitely have to be her accuracy in throwing handcuffs to apprehend criminals from a distance. She hardly ever misses her mark and is always able to surprise unsuspecting opponents with such an uncommon tactic. While she likes riding motorcycles, her small frame prevents her from mounting the more powerful ones. There has been many an occasion where she would hitch a ride with a member of Logi and catch a fleeing opponent with her handcuff toss or a good whack of her jitte.
Character Quote 4:
"Considering I’m your average midget in appearance, I’m not sure if I should be happy or not even though it helps keep my opponents’ guards down…"
Trivia
*As mentioned earlier, she is fond of the mystery genre and have also watched several police shows, no matter how antiquated they may be.
*She likes eating katsudon while a lampshade is on the same table for some reason.
*She shares a non-too pleasant relationship with Riko Mine from the Inquesta 2nd year class. It is said that their parents knew each other. While Kyouko (affectionately nicknamed Kyokkyun by Riko, much to the former’s dismay) would rather stay away from the hyperactive senior, she is sometimes pounced upon and ‘harrassed’ by the mischievous Riko.
*She prefers lighter-flavored dishes.
*She has a small stature despite her efforts to gain some more needed weight and height. Her efforts seem to go nowhere.
*She refers to the trio of Kinji, Muto and Shiranui as the 2nd Year Three Idiots in her mind.
Author's note
I blame Sheba for blasting me with so many profiles in HnAOC. :heh: I’ve already read the novel up to the latest translated chapter and I can say I’m liking it so far. Kyouko is an OC that came to my mind considering the references the original author shows through the character Riko. I’m not one for subtlety so people should easily figure out who my OC is related to. Consider this a test, but I might very well write some more characters if the interest stays high.
I still consider this profile incomplete, so I may post time and again for some updates. As many OC-makers here from the Nanoha OC thread can attest, I like my big profiles. :heh:
Anyways, reviews would be much appreciated. :3
Of course, I'll get to reading and commenting the existing OC's here later.:)
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-04, 06:16
Support character - The She-Wolf
http://img94.imageshack.us/img94/8987/kaedefujita.th.png (http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/94/kaedefujita.png/)
Kaede in her Sunday's clothes
Name: Kaede Fujita nicknamed The She-Wolf of Butei
(theorical) VA: Yukana
Nationality: Japanese
Age: 17
Class: 2nd Year
Butei Rank: A
Ancestor: Goro Fujita (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sait%C5%8D_Hajime)
Department: Inquesta (Assault elective)
Bloodline Ability: Atemporal Sight
Weapon: A katana and a M1911 pistol
Friends: Yves Brunet, Nene Otonashi and Yasmin Saif.
Character Quotes:
"Hidari Katate Hira Tsuki!!!!"
Background:
As the daughter of a family of police officers, this second year student at Tokyo Butei High have enrolled in this school to follow her childhood friend, the japan-born frenchman Yves Brunet. Together, they formed a duo that have performed fine in the various missions they have taken and the fact that they are often seen together have been subject of various rumors regarding a possible romantic relationship. However, this have not stopped Kaede from getting her own faction of fans who are "moe for maidens with eyepatches", much more to her annoyance. Moreover, the spread of the information regarding Kaede's ancestry have added up to her annoyance since they are now longing to see her wearing the famous clothes worn by the Shinsengumi. Other than that, she is one swordmaiden among others like Shirayuki and Aila Wallace Cairns.
Personality:
She is usually a quiet girl, and also the more cold-blooded of the duo. She likes to take a few steps back and trying to analyze a situation to find out how to take advantage of it. The knowledge of her ancestry have made her hard-working and demanding toward herself, this makes her rather competitive with the other sword users of Butei. Kaede also knows that her nickname have been given to her because of her ancestry, rather than her own merits. It slightly annoys her but it pushes her to do her best to actually earn it.
Ability:
Taking out her eyepatch during an activity with high stress activate her own unique ability. Her brain activity speed up to the point that her subjective time slow down, this allows her to react accordingly to threats. However, she cannot maintain this state for more than thirty seconds and have to close her eye or cover it with an eyepatch again, otherwise she may start feeling lightheadness. Even after putting her eyepatch back on, the use of this ability cause a crippling headache to set in after three minutes and she have to lay down for six hours until it goes away.
Style:
Kaede's style reflects her ancestry. Like him, she is fond of thrust attacks, namely the Gatotsu, that have proved to be quite fearsome during many confrontations. Where Yves is more flamboyant and attack to overwhelm the enemy until that poor soul drop, Kaede is more into silently tread around the target to analyze him and suddenly attack at the slightest sight of a weakness, like a wolf. About the Gatotsu, whatever the technique have actually been used by the historical Saito Hajime or is an invention of mangaka is up to debate. However, this have not stopped Kaede from including it in her staple attacks.
Trivia
*She is not as fond of history drama as Yves is. Her movies and series preferences goes to action movies and shounen manga. Her favorites are Once Upon a Time in China, and One Piece.
*Her musical preferences goes for anything that sounds majestic. As a result, those preferences can range from classical music to power metal, and Queen. She says ot makes her heart burning with courage.
*She is an excellent cook and will gladly cook bento for her friend Yves.
*Speaking of food, while her ancestor is famous as a heavy drinker, Kaede is more of a sweet tooth, her favourite pastries being the taiyaki.
*She is easily scared and yet watches horror movies, all the better for her if she have Yves to cling to. She reasons that, like arsenic, fear is something she needs to take on small doses until it makes her stronger.
*She sees Shirayuki and Aila as comrades and friendly rivals. As a result, she will not miss an opportunity to challenge them to a swordfight.
Author's note
Ah Kaede, that one character is born from the conclusion that Yves have needed a friend. Then it matured, from just a friend, she have become Yves' Osananajimi and descendant of the famous Hajime Saito. In the cast of characters I have created so far, Kentaro is the one who is happily married, given his age, while Yves and Kaede are the otp of the Yves + Kaede + Nene + Yasmin group. There may be teasing from every sides but in the end, Kaede will be the one victorious, unlike the other Kaede from that other series.
Next ones in line
Nene
http://img546.imageshack.us/img546/294/neneportrait.jpg
Yasmin
http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/263/yasminportrait.jpg/
Characters so far
Kirsten Vikernes (Assault)
Preston Lee Whitworth (Medica) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3612129#post3612129)
Amelie D'Artagnan (Inquista)
Fiorenza Diotallevi (Logi)
Sanae Noriaki (Amdo) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3619064#post3619064)
Jin Yamazaki (SSR) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3622879#post3622879)
Svetlana Dragovic (Snipe) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3623641#post3623641)
Naoko Kazami (Connect) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3624161#post3624161)
Erin Dee Kirishima (Informa) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3624419#post3624419)
Kentaro Murasame (Amdo) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3631836#post3631836)
Yves Brunet (Assault) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3636594#post3636594)Looks like Saito's "buddha wife" got him an amazing offspring. :uhoh:
I bow to Sheba. I have been completely and utterly owned by your entire work in this thread. :bow::bow::bow:
I can't believe I'm doing this... but oh well. :eyespin:
Name: Kyouko Z. Akechi
http://i.imgur.com/7VcFWl.jpg (http://imgur.com/7VcFW)
Nicknames: Kyou-chan, Kyokkyun, Omawari-chan (Police-chan)
Gender: Female
Age: 16
Occupation: Butei High 1st year student
Butei Ranking: B
Eyes: Hazel
Hair: Brown, usually in a ponytail
Primary Department: Inquesta
Elective: Amdo
Usual wear: Butei uniform
Specialization: Criminal investigation and apprehension
Equipment:
1 modified Colt OHWS (Affectionately named the Aya Hiraga Custom, not that Kyouko ever uses the name)
A set of jitte (http://www.samurai-swords-for-sale.com/store/images/P/jitte.jpg) Here's a wiki about them (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Jitte_%28weapon%29)
Handcuffs. LOTS of them.
Theme Song: ‘一気に決めるゼ! (- Which is Decided at a Stroke!)’
x0q70RlMyTM
Character Quote 1:
"Be good and take the rope!"
(An antiquated Japanese phrase meaning ‘be arrested’)
Background:
Kyouko is a first year Tokyo Butei High student from a wealthy family of Japanese Mystery Novel writers. Showing great athletic capability and a firm, if not readily apparent sense of justice form a young age, she took the exam as a Butei and passed with decent scores. She keeps a rather low profile at school similar to how intelligent but unpopular students would have, but seems to be a close acquaintance of Inqesta's 2nd year Riko Mine.
Her father is said to have been a famous member of the International Criminal Police Organization (INTERPOL), though she hardly ever talks about her parents.
Character Quote 2:
“Hai, goyou.” *handcuffs someone*
(“Here, you’re under arrest.”)
Personality:
Outwardly calm and levelheaded to the point of appearing apathetic, it is a very usual sight to see Kyouko yawning and looking bored from the daily school life as a Butei. It is easy to approach her but is also easy to ignore as just another student. The only people so far that are shown to be able to get on her nerves enough that she dissolves into a blushing wild-cat screaming outdated police battle cries are Riko Mine (almost everytime) and Tohyama Kinji (When they first met. No prices for guessing how Kinji was during that time.:p)
http://i.imgur.com/5CJXbl.jpg (http://imgur.com/5CJXb)
Most of the time, she is a polite student who may look just a tad bit uninterested on whoever she's talking to. Sarcastic comments and blunt corrections can be expected as well. Her speech pattern sometimes slips to old-fashioned Japanese when she gets excited, a bad habit she attributes to having watched one too many Jidai Geki shows when she was younger. She gives small smiles sparingly and to date, nobody has been able to see her laugh naturally in her class yet. The only time she was seen by the class laughing was when she’s being tickled… by Riko.
Character Quote 3:
"RIKO MINE! YOU’RE UNDER ARREST FOR ACTS OF LASCIVIOUSNESS!!!"
Abilities and fighting style:
As a 1st-year student of Inquesta, she is still learning the ropes of high-level criminal investigation. She is shown to have a lot of potential with her intuition and ability to think outside the box. She has, on occasion been able to outsmart her seniors like Riko with her intuition and 'experience with mystery novels,' as she puts it. She also took an elective course in Amdo and is so far creating variations of jittes and handcuffs.
As an individual combatant, while she is one could call a very 'standard-class' Butei, she is shown to be very capable of handling situations where a 1st year like her would usually be fumbling around with. She's a good shot and is also skilled in wielding a jitte, having broken many practice swords of fellow sparring partners. She has surprisingly high arm strength and can handle the recoil of many guns, as well as carry people heavier than her with ease. Her most remarkable talent would definitely have to be her accuracy in throwing handcuffs to apprehend criminals from a distance. She hardly ever misses her mark and is always able to surprise unsuspecting opponents with such an uncommon tactic. While she likes riding motorcycles, her small frame prevents her from mounting the more powerful ones. There has been many an occasion where she would hitch a ride with a member of Logi and catch a fleeing opponent with her handcuff toss or a good whack of her jitte.
Character Quote 4:
"Considering I’m your average midget in appearance, I’m not sure if I should be happy or not even though it helps keep my opponents’ guards down…"
Trivia
*As mentioned earlier, she is fond of the mystery genre and have also watched several police shows, no matter how antiquated they may be.
*She likes eating katsudon while a lampshade is on the same table for some reason.
*She shares a non-too pleasant relationship with Riko Mine from the Inquesta 2nd year class. It is said that their parents knew each other. While Kyouko (affectionately nicknamed Kyokkyun by Riko, much to the former’s dismay) would rather stay away from the hyperactive senior, she is sometimes pounced upon and ‘harrassed’ by the mischievous Riko.
*She prefers lighter-flavored dishes.
*Due to her small stature despite her efforts to gain some more needed weight and height, her efforts seem to go nowhere.
*She refers to the trio of Kinji, Muto and Shiranui as the 2nd Year Three Idiots in her mind.
Author's note
I blame Sheba for blasting me with so many profiles in HnAOC. :heh: I’ve already read the novel up to the latest translated chapter and I can say I’m liking it so far. Kyouko is an OC that came to my mind considering the references the original author shows through the character Riko. I’m not one for subtlety so people should easily figure out who my OC is related to. Consider this a test, but I might very well write some more characters if the interest stays high.
I still consider this profile incomplete, so I may post time and again for some updates. As many OC-makers here from the Nanoha OC thread can attest, I like my big profiles. :heh:
Anyways, reviews would be much appreciated. :3
Of course, I'll get to reading and commenting the existing OC's here later.:)...even Aaron. With Kyonko. And DOGGIE THEME.
I can die in peace now.
*dies knowing that an OC thread is in good hands*
Name: Kyouko Z. Akechi
I can somehow imagine her having a little3 brother that called her "Kyou" or even "Kyon".
*is shot* :eyespin:
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In the meantime, some Informa Students managed to intercept a message that was transmitted during their information exercises.
BEGIN_INTERCEPT
DECODING...
DISPLAY_INTERCEPT
FR: Counter Stop
TO: M-SECT
SB: Tower Language Proficient Entity Search Results
Greetings,
I, the [Counter Stop] has fulfilled a part of the task conditions that have been imposed on me by fellows in M-SECT- the search for a being proficient in the magic brought about by singing the [Tower Language].
A girl named Revvy Telia (https://docs.google.com/document/d/1FyO3Uh9O0GFqWB3S6suS22j0XRJWhPLuU4SWigneyWM/edit?hl=en_US&authkey=CO781pQO) has managed to profess the capability after a year of training under the curriculum of the school that I had managed to integrate myself in, while searching for the [Orgel of Destruction].
So far, only a very basic magic spell has been so far been produced from her singing, a ball of primal energy laced with the most basic of emotions- based on the score reading. [Primal Word] as I have called it, is rather powerful for a basic tier spell, even making her trip down on her face when she tosses it.
As she sings, the field of battle becomes demarcated up to about 300m from her, this area I call the [Battlesphere] is where the song effects are the strongest and deal the most influence upon anyone inside of it.
The area around Revvy up to about 3m is then demarcated as the [Heroine Field], a field in which her free energies flow in and out in modulation, becoming a sort of personal space that protects her from any outside influence- which is indicated by a strange triangular sigil at her feet. It is rather refreshing inside the [Heroine Field] and a quick trip there for allies like us can put us back into the fighting mood quick. Though those she designates as foes will endanger her when they enter the [Heroine Field] and must be quickly removed from it or else the magic may release prematurely or worse, she gets hit.
There is a rather strange occurence when she’s singing up a spell- sometimes the energy fluctuations of the [Heroine Field] swing so wildly that the nearest static scores near or in it get affected, namely her clothes, which then rip off- though it seems to improve her spell’s charging- or rather she’s charging it at speed so that the fight would end quickly so that she can hide get some clothes.
Further checks and improvements are being done to increase the subject’s proficiency.
End Trans-
P.S.
I know that some of you Informa Students are looking at this transmission right now. You are free to take a crack at the challenges presented in this message- at your own risk.
End Transmission
END_INTERCEPT
*hides*
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:topicoff::topicoff:
Off Topic:
Somehow someone decided that my ISP was good for spamming and thus had it listed under a DNSBL that is now keeping me out of chat by means of Z:line.
*goes to stab Phean*
EagleBlue
2011-06-04, 08:59
My first time making OC. What do you guys think?
Name: Charles Ramirez
Age: 17
Butei Rank: A
Nationality: Filipino
Physical Characteristics: He has short black hair. He is of average height and slim but fit.
Weapons: A M14 rifle, a Colt M1911 pistol and an assortment of combat knives
Division: Assault
Background:
Charles is a transfer student from the Philippines. When he was still a child, he told his parents that he wanted to be a detective. Most of his time was spent with his grandfather, a former soldier and an avid collector of weapons. From knives to rifles, his grandfather asked him if he wanted to learn how to use those weapons. Charles an eager child said yes, and then began his love for all weapons. Each day he spent with his grandfather, he taught him how to maintain and use each weapon in his collection. Charles’ mother eventually found out and scolded the both of them but let it continue since it made Charles happy.
Just before entering high school, his grandfather showed him an application form for the Philippine Butei High. Charles asked him why he was showing him this. His grandfather told him that Butei carry different kinds of weapons and that Charles had his dream of becoming a detective while having a love for weapons. He told Charles that it was a good opportunity to achieve his dream and having a look at different weapons as he trained. He gave him the application form and asked him to decide. It was hard for Charles to decide but after two days he was finished. He asked his parents for their permission, which they gave, and started to study at the Philippine Butei High.
Personality:
Charles is best described as a happy but calm person. Occasionally, he will ask any person nearby if he could see their weapon but if the person said no, he does not ask again most of the time. When training and maintaining his weapons he hums either a vintage anime song or a Super Sentai theme song.
Skills:
Charles is proficient with rifles, shotguns and pistols. He is a good marksman so he mostly fights at a distance and disables his enemy for there. He is not too confident for his skills in close quarter combat but can use knife decently when needed. He prefers long ranged combat rather than close quarter combat. In combat he would try mostly to support his teammates and take down the most threatening enemy. Can speak English, Japanese and Filipino fluently.
Quotes:
“This is why I love being in Assault. I get to meet different people and see their guns. Or if they’re criminals take their guns away.”
“I wonder if those guys in Amdo could make Voltes Five.”
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-04, 10:40
Tohyama Kinji and my OC, Arisato Minato goes on their first mission (of sorts) which starts with a quick interrogation and ends in a fiery car chase! Quick oneshot and character introduction :D In case people forgot, this is what he looks like
http://img59.imageshack.us/img59/439/bc1a469863662e4edcf78a1.th.jpg (http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/59/bc1a469863662e4edcf78a1.jpg/)
"Oi! Arisato! What the hell are you doing?!"
To say that Tohyama Kinji is having an abnormal day is an understatement.
It first started in during lunch when he was approached to do a job, which he flat out refused naturally. When both him and Aria got back to his dorm, they found the lock on his door broken and left intentionally open. Walking in, he was greeted by the sight off hundreds of porno magazines pictures littering his entire floor including his bathroom and bedroom. While porno pictures have no effect on his Hysteria Mode, it did somewhat trigger a hysteric response from the twintail Gunslinger ball of fury that is Kanzaki Holmes Aria.
In the center of all this mountain of pornography, is a single post card with a picture of an adorable kitten on one side; on the other side is a phone number and the words "Call me when you had enough - A.M.".
A.M. - Arisato Minato.
When Aria first harassed him to team up with her months ago, Kinji thought he had seen the worst of it; this guy is far worst. He heard ghost stories of people being coerce into helping him in his crazy assignments when he somehow got the Libyan Secret Police to sent them a fruit-basket; while it wasn't anything particularly harmful, they had the armed prosecutors questioning them for weeks. Of course, those were just rumors, but who knows... Compared to a couple of porn pictures, Kinji thought he got off easy.
The next day he called Arisato to take the job.
When asked why he didn't want to bring Aria for the job, Arisato simply replied.
"An E ranked Butei is far more affordable than an S ranked one."
Cheap bastard.
But the scene before him right now was something that Kinji didn't sign up for.
"Oi stop this!"
There were two strangers, both Japanese males in their early thirties wearing cheap suits, they were sweating uncontrollably and on the verge of tears. Both their hands and feet were bound to separate wooden chairs by zip-tie. In front of each of them were two large glass panel windows- big enough for a grown man to fall right through.
Arisato calmly loaded a fresh magazine into his Heckler & Koch USP .45ACP with two-tone finish and chambered a round.
"It's time to play 'Who talks first'." He spoke.
BAM! BAM! BAM! BAM!
The two prisoners flinched at the sound of gunfire close to their ears. Arisato fired four shots in total; two for each of the large windows, weakening them.
He then begins to blindfold the two of them, each with a piece of black cloth.
"We're going to have a little conversation; one of you is going to tell me where the girl is... While the other, is going to go out the window.
"Keep your mouth shut!"
"Screw you!"
"I SAID SHUT UP!!"
The two thugs bickered, but Arisato doesn't seem concerned.
"So... Who feels like talking?" He went behind both of them and nudge their chairs to freak them. "Okay guys, last chance to volunteer- Anybody? Anybody at all?"
"Oi! Are you serious?!" Kinji yelled.
"Nobody ever laughs at my jokes." Arisato shrugged.
"You can't kill them! Aren't you forgetting the-!!"
"It's a little too late for that; we're not going to find the girl in time if we don't do this. Do you think I won't sacrifice a couple of lowlifes to save her?"
That's right, the Multimillionaire heiress was kidnapped nearly 48 hours ago, both the police and Butei were running out of time.
"You know what the penalties are! If you do this a fate worse than death awaits you! Are you actually willing to give all of that up for some girl you've never met?! Why do you have to go so far!!?"
Arisato looked him dead in the eye.
"If you have to ask that question that meets you still won't understand; This is my conviction."
He was serious, he's seriously going to push one of them out the window.
"There has to be another way!"
"Maybe... But my way is fun too!"
Without warning, Arisato kicked one of the man from behind, sending him crashing through the window and screaming to his inevitable fate.
"NOOO!"
Kinji doesn't know why he ran to the window, it was too late to save the man, there was nothing he could do. He steel himself as he looked down, fully expecting to see a bloody corpse lying on the pavement.
But instead, he saw the chair hanging a few feet off the ground. It was being held firm by a steel cable connected to an anchor outside the window ledge.
Kinji gave Arisato an incredulous look, who then winked and signaled him to remain quiet.
Of course the other guy had no way of knowing this, finally snapped and started spilling everything.
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"The 'who talks first' interrogation technique originally involve taking two blindfolded prisoners up in a helicopter and tossing one out to get the other to talk. When a helicopter is not available, any tall building will do." Arisato explained to Kinji once they were out of the room. "You don't actually want to kill anyone of course; the scream is all you really need."
"You could have told me your plan!" Kinji scowled.
"I need you to be convincing; normally I would slowly break them down and put them in an unstable psychological state, but that would take time. The fastest way for them to believe that I would do it is to have you believe that I would do it, and so you would really try to talk me out of it, further cementing the fear in their minds that I would really do it.... Get it?"
"What happen to Butei Law Article Section 1?!"
"Oh yeah, good work on not revealing that in there; for the moment I thought you were going to tell them that we were with the Butei- then I might really have to kill them..."
"That's not my point! I don't like your field tactics!"
"And I don't like your whining, are you going to pout all day?" Arisato replied nonchalantly. "We got the address of the location they're holding the girl, so just call one of your harem girls to go pick her up-"
"What are you-!" Then Kinji saw that Arisato was looking out of the window with a serious face. "What is it?"
"We got company... Looks like their friends found us already..."
A fleet of black cars parked outside, several guys with automatic pistols started pouring into the building. Kinji ran towards the emergency stairs and saw them coming up.
"Hey we got guys coming up the stairs!"
"Hmm... I've got an idea; I hope you brought enough rope Tohyama..."
"Why what are you planning this time- HEY?!"
Arisato grabbed the large bag that he carried with him here and ran back into the room with the one remaining prisoner and kicked him down on his side before asking him a simple question.
"Hey, how much do you weight?"
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"YOU'VE GOT TO BE KIDDING MEEEEEEE!!"
Both Arisato and Kinji smashed through the glass window, holding on to a rope as they fell down.
To repel down a building you need something to slow your descend, usually that's an anchor point.
"Arrghhhh!"
But a counterweight is equally effective; although it's not much fun for whoever gets to be the counterweight. Which in this case is the unfortunate fellow that they left still tied up in the chair. Arisato had him dragged way back in the room to give time for his body weight to slow the both of them down. That yelling was probably him slamming into the wall, making him sure he was the one chosen to get thrown out the window.
Thankfully those idiots in suits all went into the building, leaving their vehicles unattended. But it looks like they caught on to their plan quickly and were on their way back down.
They need to get out fast.
"You shoot; I'll drive."
Arisato toss to Kinji his USP45, and with one hand on the bonnet he jumped and slide across to the driver side and threw the bag into the opposite seat. Kinji jumped into the backseat.
"What, you trust me now?"
Minato doesn't; but he knows that you don't last long doing this line of work if you don't trust anyone. If you're looking over your shoulder to see who's coming after you, you can't see where you're going. Sometimes you just have to trust your gut.
"Is this seriously how you do things?!" Kinji asked from the back seat as he chambered a round into his M92F.
"When I have to yeah!"
"How is it that you're still alive?!"
"Good Question..."Arisato managed to hot-wire the vehicle as the engine growl with life.
"I eat alot of yogurt!"
*************************************
The chase is on, and it didn't take long for more suits in black Toyotas to catch up behind them while firing off rounds. Arisato is busy showing off his offensive driving skills, while Kinji is at the back returning fire with both weapons.
"Looks like they're pulling out all the stops for us..." Kinji commented drily.
"I'm flattered."
In a firefight on the road, you've got a few options; It doesn’t matter if you’re trying to take out a moped or a dump truck, every vehicle has 3 areas of vulnerability. The driver, the engine, and the tires. A can of paint across the windshield can blind the driver. A 50mm cannon can kill the engine. However last time they've checked, they don't have either. Without something high-caliber, you're not going to be able to penetrate the radiator or the firewall behind it.
That leaves two options.
Kinji fired at the windshield with both the USP45 and the M92F; spiderweb cracks appear on the glass but it doesn't seem to intimidate their pursuers. He's having trouble shaking them of his tail, who apparently actually know how to drive.
"Tohyama, aim for the ground in front of the car!"
"What would that do?!"
"It'll ricochet bullets off the ground up through the undercarriage, which is one of the least reinforced parts of a car!"
Clever bastard.
Even without his Hysteria mode, it wasn't exactly a difficult shot to pull off. Kinji only fired six rounds before the driver swirl into a large dumpster on the side of the road.
"For sheer panic, it's hard to beat bullets coming up from the floorboards!" Arisato added.
They took of one car, that leaves five more to go.
Arisato makes a quick drift on an intersection turning right. Force, power, and torque are the measure of any sports car. But on winding roads, the key to fast driving is fast braking. Four-piston disc brakes will kill speed quickly and smoothly allowing you to keep your foot on the gas longer.
But now there's another car rushing to meet them. Arisato used one hand to pull a couple of containers out of the bag beside him; Kinji drops under cover to reload and wonders what he doing.
"Is that...Brake fluid? Won't burn fast enough to do anything!" he warns.
"It will when it's mixed with chlorine dioxide and some other stuff." Said Arisato as he tapes a glass jar full of white crystals to the bottle.
Someone's been going to the chemical store... Kinji thought to himself.
Sure enough, when Arisato took a quick left turn, he tosses out his homemade bomb out the window. It exploded into a mighty impressive fireball that the pursuing car drives through, and up onto an embankment that rolls the car right over.
"We can't keep this up forever!" Kinji yelled.
"Then I guess it's time to call for back-up of our own!"
"What? You want me to get Aria?"
"No! She needs to focus on rescuing the girl! I've got someone else in mind!"
Arisato flip open the phone and dialed a number.
It rang two times before a familiar, perky voice appeared on the other side.
"Minato-kun! You won't believe the deal I got today!"
"Raimei-"
"This guy was selling Browning 9mms for 200 a piece!"
"Raimei I-"
"Honestly, I'm better at buying guns than I am buying shoes; and I'm REALLY good at buying shoes!"
"FUYUMI RAIMEI."
"What?!"
Arisato took a deep breath to calm down.
"Remember that drive, past the factory where we first met? Do you think we could do something similar where we picnicked last month?"
"...Will you be making this drive soon?"
"As fast as I can manage."
The three remaining black Toyotas as closing in fast and Kinji is running out of ammunition for both weapons.
"I'm liking your plan less and less!" He complained.
"We'll be fine as long as we can keep them behind us."
A single shot knocked out his side mirror.
"...Well, relatively fine." He corrected.
It was another fifteen minutes of high speed chase through the causeway before Arisato turn into a narrow back alley drive way. It was a straight road down.
At least 400m in front of him, he saw a familiar cute girl with a brown ponytail style wearing the Butei uniform waving a detonator in her hands.
Fuyumi Raimei.
"Here we go!" Arisato accelerated, the moment he drove past the first car parked on the side-
BOOOOOOOMMM!!!
Raimei detonated the C4 charge that she had placed under it, the car flipped a good 2.5 meters into the air and crashed in front of the first black Toyota, engulfing it with flames.
BOOOOOOOMMM!!!
When Arisato drove past the second car, it too ignited in a great ball of fire, causing the second Toyota to drive off and gets flipped upside down while the last car crashed into it.
With the car chase over, Arisato pulled up beside Raimei down the road, who was showing a 'V' symbol with her index and middle finger to represent victory.
Kinji at the back seat struggles to find his voice after they were knocked out by the explosion.
"Where did you meet her?" was the only thing that came to his mind.
While Raimei climbed into the passenger seat, Arisato decided that it was safe to let Kinji down from here. They called to check up on Aria, who reported that the rescue mission was a success and the kidnapped girl would reunite with her family soon. Arisato would then ditched the car somewhere else.
"Well, it's been fun, we should try that again some other time."
Crap I hope not, it's people like you that is preventing me from leading my normal life. No, in fact you're worst than a Butei; who the hell in their right mind would use a E ranked Butei for this kind of mission?! At least with Aria there's a chance to go into Hysteria Mode! Kinji mumbled to himself.
"I just can't figure you out; you're clearly not just any Dagula- What the hell are you?" Kinji asked as he toss the USP4 back to Arisato and stepped out.
The boy smirked as he answered.
"My name is Arisato Minato; I used to be a spy."
I'll comment on the new OCs tomorrow... :cool:
Ze sniper.
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Name: Tomomi Imamura
Age: 16 (turning 17 this year)
Gender: Female
Date of Birth: 7th of October
Nationality: Japan
Class: 2nd Year
Division: Snipe (Inquesta as elective)
Butei Rank: A
Ancestry: A bit of an obscure German Wehrmacht sniper from World War II (her grandfather)
Equipment: Remington (http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v606/kct/Weapons/P1270012.jpg)Model (http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v606/kct/Weapons/DSCN05940011.jpg)700PSS (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Remington_700#Model_700P_-_Police_version) bolt-action rifle (long-action version), Glock 19 (http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v606/kct/Handguns/DSCN3998.jpg) handgun, Simonich Raven Combat (http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v606/kct/Weapons/simur2.jpg) knife
Other Info:
Height: 159cm
Weight: 45kg
Build: Slender
Vitals: 84/55/82
Eyes: Dark brown
Hair: Black
Hair Style: Long, parted at the right side
Facial Features: Typical of Japanese girls
C.V.: Mai Nakahara (Mai Tokiha's voice range in Mai-HiME)
Background:
One of the local students among those in the Snipe community of Tokyo Butei High, amidst the flood of foreigners wishing to learn a thing or two, Tomomi is a second year transfer student from another prefecture's Butei due to her family’s move to Tokyo. She came from a family that has no bearing on her current field of education at all. Probably because her parents wanted her to turn out a little “un-Japanese”, she was sent to live with some of her relatives in a Western country, and studied under their schooling system.
While under the care of her relatives, Tomomi picked up an interest in long-range shooting. They happened to be ardent hunters, and her grandfather always told stories about his adventures in World War II (from the point of view of someone who have seen everything from the good to the bad). Having followed them to hunting trips in forests and such also helped a bit in getting her survival skills up in the scale. That was cut short when Tomomi was summoned back home once she finished her elementary schooling due to a change of heart that her parents have, although that also means that she’ll have to return to an environment where the concept of shooting is rather alien to the normal folk. That has not stopped the girl, considering local laws meant the platform used for long-range shooting is usually something that can be obtained domestically.
Although that would be sufficient for most people, Tomomi wanted to do something more than bench shooting, and that resulted in her eventually deciding to think of a serious future in doing “what those cool folks with sniper rifles in movies do”, and enrolled herself to a Butei High in her home region, although such a move is rather brief with the aforementioned move to Tokyo. Given her rather out-of-the-box mentality and her rather good performance in doing her jobs and academics, Tomomi earned enough to move to a proper long-range shooting platform instead of using a hunting rifle for the job. Currently is living in the girls’ dorm, although she regularly goes back to her parents’ house on the weekends.
Personality:
Unlike some of the stoic snipers, Tomomi is rather chirpy, a result of her early education overseas. She does not have any strange personality traits, considering herself to be approachable to others and friendly without any funny facades. Still, being in Snipe, Tomomi tends to focus everything on putting the bullet where they’re supposed to be in a mission, with often crazy preparation associated with her kind just so that they can get the job done at the end of the day.
Despite being the rather talkative and “chill” sort of person she is, admittedly she can still get rather annoyed with flirts or folks trying to get a peek of what’s under her clothes, at least due to her experience at a mixed-stream school during her elementary days overseas. Tomomi large considered the guys over Japan to be “no different” from their Western peers.
While Tomomi is a little particular about the little details, she does not come off as being ridiculously strict. Preferring to take into account of the situation on hand, she’s the type that thinks before acting. That might came off a bit as a bit of delay on her part, although she backs them up with proper reasoning and justification to ensure that the best results are obtainable with the least amount of trouble.
Although she have a little bit of foreign blood inside her, Tomomi maintains that she’s no different from the others.
Abilities and Skills:
Although she’s no match to Reki in terms of sheer ability, she makes up for it with methodological study of the theater of operations to provide her with the best advantage in terms of cover and vantage point, since she feels that urban sniping is very different from that of a military’s. She’s capable of pulling the trigger with either hand, but she does not fire two weapons at a time. Tomomi could fistfight using her training in some martial arts, but that is usually a measure of last resort.
Like most other snipers, Tomomi prefers to stay as far out as her rifle permits to avoid being noticed, although she keeps a handgun for “those situations requiring such a weapon” for close quarter combat. Tomomi’s method of sniping can be considered to be nothing short of practical, without any form of insanity that gave Reki a rank of S. However, she usually places high priority on shot placement due to the weapon’s glaring disadvantage compared to faster shooters.
Facts:
* Her mother is a mix of German and Japanese, with her grandparents meeting somewhere in World War II (her grandfather was a sniper with “a decent record”), making the girl ¼ German, although she looks completely Japanese.
* Although Tomomi picked a bolt-action rifle, she’s still holding out for a suitable semi-automatic platform.
* In addition to the scope and bipod, the Remington rifle is modified with a steel hinged floorplate/trigger guard assembly from the M24 sniper rifle to extend the internal magazine capacity to 5+1 rounds of .308 Winchester/7.62mm NATO ammunition.
* Like most of the folks in Snipe, she sees Reki as a friendly rival...though there's still a massive gap to fill.
* A friend of Svetlana "Lana" Dragovic, probably because they spent a lot of time hanging out with each other’s company (and trying to out-snipe each other during Snipe lessons). However, a particular Jin Yamazaki and Preston Lee Whitworth can do enough to irk the normally-easygoing Tomomi.
* Besides Japanese and English, she picked up a bit of German, although she remarked that “it is an angry language”, and rather not be caught speaking it.
* Jin constantly made a point about how she look more adorable in her previous Butei’s uniform (which she often wears with permission) compared to Tokyo Butei’s. He something about “the more they wear the higher the temptation.”
* She apparently listens to quite a variety of music, from random bouts of J-pop/Mando-pop/K-pop to the rhythms of hip-hop/R&B/rap to the beats of trance/techno/electronic.
* Thinks Kinji Tohyama should learn how to deal with girls in a better fashion.
SaintessHeart
2011-06-04, 16:15
We should add more older characters.
Name : Reyvateil Rivia Tchaikovsky
Nationality: Polish, Russian/English Ancestry
Age : 19
Butei Rank: B
Ancestor: Tchaikovsky, mysterious past ancestry
Department: Medica
Bloodline Ability: Gold eyes that are able to see in the dark, an ability to lower blood pressure and calm nerves through singing/chanting
Weapon: A silver-bladed sword named "Grace"
Friends: Ayari/Kanari, Karla, Reisen, Meikyo, Alicia
A fresh graduate from the French Butei Academy, she is under an internship as she intends to earn a medical license in the future. However, due to Ayari and Alicia's plan of setting up a "bungee-jumping" club in school, she was drawn into the fray as there will always be students injured during training despite all safety precautions.
Considered to be Meikyo's nurse and the school's health counselor, she has rather inhuman traits. She claims to be stuck at the age of 18 for the rest of her life because her cells do no deteriorate when sub-dividing, but she may suddenly die after the age of 40 due to an ancestral genetic disorder. Not only that, she is able to see perfectly in the dark without a light source or NV equipment.
The most mysterious thing is that she holds as a weapon : Grace. She says that the sword is not meant to be for men as "it is a symbol of beauty and gracefulness". True enough, it seems that the make and the construction of the sword is meant to be lightweight and having a thinner grip, more fit for a lady than a man, despite being tested to be from the middle ages. However, despite its age and supposed "flimsiness", it is still a sword of perfect quality, and in wind or rain, it is able to resonate sounds to confuse opponents from where the direction of the sword is coming from. Also, the silvered blade of the sword allows Reyva to redirect the sunlight into her opponent's eye, allowing her to close in with ease; at night or under low-light conditions, the sword swings leave afterimages to confuse opponents as to where the blade is coming from. The final unusual quality of the weapon, is despite its weight, it floats on water.
However, it seems that the blade may not originally be named as it is. When replacing the grip, Karla and Reisen had found a set of rune inscriptions on it spelling ᛚᛟᚻᛖᚾᚷᚱᛁᚾ, translated as "Lohengrin", the name of the legendary Knight of the Swans from the middle ages. How had the sword survived so long, and how did it end up in her hands? This is something that she doesn't know herself, other than it was handed to her by her parents in her second year in the French Butei Academy.
Outside of work, she is generally a carefree and gentle young lady, though she doesn't take sides when it comes to solving conflicts between people. She claims that the bungee jumping mystery is the first time she has ever taken a side as "the buffoon on the boat and the drunk party animal aren't doing their jobs as guardians of the two girls".
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-04, 21:27
More indepth reviews to come, but did Saintess just ninja my Lancelot character from right under me?! 2 people can't have the same Aerondight! Now I have to rewrite my prologue and rethink my entire setup! :eyespin:
NinjaDude
2011-06-05, 01:29
Well, I felt like giving this a shot. If this goes well I have a few more I am thinking of, so tell me what you think. Opinions are lovely.
Joshua LaCasera - Inquesta (https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ulXPep7wlquJOeO_wV56no9-P-wITnlJ2JV54oyS2-g/edit?hl=en_US&authkey=CLu5psYL#)
SaintessHeart
2011-06-05, 02:37
More indepth reviews to come, but did Saintess just ninja my Lancelot character from right under me?! 2 people can't have the same Aerondight! Now I have to rewrite my prologue and rethink my entire setup! :eyespin:
There are two other legendary Middle-age swords - Excalibur and Joyuese. Jeanne holds Durandal, the sword of Roland, knight of Charlemagne and wielder of Joyuese. :heh:
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-05, 03:20
There are two other legendary Middle-age swords - Excalibur and Joyuese. Jeanne holds Durandal, the sword of Roland, knight of Charlemagne and wielder of Joyuese. :heh:
Don't forget Cortana, the sword of Ogier the Dane.
"My name is Cortana, of the same steel and temper as Joyeuse and Durendal."
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-05, 03:27
There are two other legendary Middle-age swords - Excalibur and Joyuese. Jeanne holds Durandal, the sword of Roland, knight of Charlemagne and wielder of Joyuese. :heh:
You see, while Athra's blade is meant to be a mystery relic speculated to be Caliburn or however you spell it (I've chosen Caledfwech), Adara L. Reiniger, whom I have said plays the role of Lancelot in the round table of warriors named X-Butei, was supposed to wield Lancelot's weapon of choice as a plot-driving upgrade. There can't be 2 Arondites.
Furthermore, if Rey turnsout to be the Lancelot descendent, it again conflicts with the fluff I have already written for Adara. The character's tension against Athra and her role in the AthraJimAdara triangle depends on it.
The simplest fix is that Lancelot somehow lost his weapon and its possesion ended up with a pianist, possibly leading up to Adara claiming that weapon later. Or as I suspect will be better if I take your character in place of Adara (saving the Nanoha OCers some grief as well, since Adara was based on an OC related to Lancelot there). But that would mean either I modify Rey's character or change the prologue and the plot direction of my fic. And it'll also mean she will be involved in a tragic Arthurian romance.
Options are open to any of the ways, just asking which would you prefer and ensuring that informed consent is made. :heh:
Don't forget Cortana, the sword of Ogier the Dane.
"My name is Cortana, of the same steel and temper as Joyeuse and Durendal."
Oh that's wielded by Athra's "friendly" rival based at Buckingham Palace. :p
...does this mean that the Queen of England is very... "rocking out"? :uhoh:
You could just, ya know, ask SaintessHeart to swap his Arondight for a different sword, since your OC's backstory is kinda reliant on Arondight?
Like this:
SaintessHeart, would you mind changing your OC's sword for a different one? Perhaps Galatine, the sword of Sir Gawain, or maybe Gram, the dragonslayer?
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-05, 03:50
Oh that's wielded by Athra's "friendly" rival based at Buckingham Palace. :p
...does this mean that the Queen of England is very... "rocking out"? :uhoh:
Somehow I knew this would come up :p
You're thinking of Curtana, the "Sword of Mercy" or "Edward the Confessor's sword", one of England's Holy swords.
Cortana on the other hand is a legendary sword of the French wield by Ogier the Dane :) which according to legend, bore the inscription "My name is Cortana, of the same steel and temper as Joyeuse and Durendal."
If you're interested to know, there's also a fourth sword in that poem ;)
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-05, 04:02
You could just, ya know, ask SaintessHeart to swap his Arondight for a different sword, since your OC's backstory is kinda reliant on Arondight?
Like this:
SaintessHeart, would you mind changing your OC's sword for a different one? Perhaps Galatine, the sword of Sir Gawain, or maybe Gram, the dragonslayer?I just realized that Gawain or even a later descendent could've forked up seperate branches of the family tree, making them distant cousins, leaving the sword the only point of contention. :heh:
Somehow I knew this would come up :p
You're thinking of Curtana, the "Sword of Mercy" or "Edward the Confessor's sword", one of England's Holy swords.
Cortana on the other hand is a legendary sword of the French wield by Ogier the Dane :) which according to legend, bore the inscription "My name is Cortana, of the same steel and temper as Joyeuse and Durendal."
If you're interested to know, there's also a fourth sword in that poem ;)Way to kill my rocking Queen Mother fantasy...
Ah Tristan's sword. It would be interesting for Athra to slowly gather up all the Matter of Britain descendents. Probably organized into smaller groups, but altogether the Round Table would be something in the 200s to 300s if legend is to be believed.
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-05, 07:52
In a completely unrelated note; did anybody catch the BBC television series of the modern retelling of Sherlock Holmes? It's pretty stylish and worth it to check out :nod: Only three episodes are out... British television is funny that way... >.>
Support character - The She-Wolf
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Kaede in her Sunday's clothes
Lol, moe for maiden with eyepatch :heh: ? But she's naturally a cute girl so pretty much she'll get alot of fans either way. For me, she's probably going to use Yukana's CC voice, that's always a plus point. For Ryoushi (You remember him?), things could get awkward considering that I've nicknamed him the [Hunter of Wolves]; originally it was mention for Ookami-san, but there's an opening to make things pretty fun.
1. My main character, Arisato Minato, would like to know if she's the type of girl who would try unusual things that "doesn't fall into her area of expertise"...? Those were his words, not mine.
2. Hmmm, Saito (the comic relief best friend), would like to know how would you rate her 'bullet-time' like ability when compared to Kinji's Hysteria mode?
3. Ada (The sexy one), would like to know if she would like to come over to try some of her Side Slit Evening Dresses... Innocently, I'm sure...
4. Fuyumi Raimei (The cute one), would like to know if she likes Platypuses or Hamsters? And whether she likes Yves- Wut?! You can't just ask people that!!!
I can't believe I'm doing this... but oh well. :eyespin:
Name: Kyouko Z. Akechi
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WHHHHHAAAATTTTTTT?!?!? Even Aaron is here?! FUZAKENNA!
1. Ryoushi (The Dojjiko pure pure boy) wonders if he had seen her before somewhere...?
2. Saito (the comic relief best friend) would like to know if she's prone to say, and I quote, "Do you want me to teach you the Rules of Society" to her arrestees...?
3. Fuyumi Raimei (The cute one), would like to know if she prefers Manatees or hamsters... I swear this girl...
4. Ada (The sexy one), would like to know if she prefers black stockings or white stockings to go along with her zettai ryouki... And if she prefers to- Okay, this part I can't say without getting into trouble.
5. Siesta (The sweet one), would like to know if she likes to drink milk... Why would that be importa- OHHHHH... I see...
Ze sniper.
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1. Arisato Minato (Mysterious Silent Bishounen, Main Character Extraordinaire), would like to know if the rumors are true that large breasts would hamper one's markswomenship... Seriously?! That's what you're going to ask?!
2. Saito (the comic relief best friend) laments that there's another cute sniper girl out there... THAT'S NOT A QUESTION!!
3. Fuyumi Raimei (The cute one), would like to know if she prefers Sperm Whales or hamsters... I give up on this girl...
4. Ada (The Sexy one), would like to know if she's the type to buy cookies for the boy she likes, or does she prefers struggling to bake them at home herself?
EagleBlue
2011-06-05, 08:51
Any opinions about my OC? I'm a bit nervous since this is my first OC.
I have a question, Butei can take their chosen division with an elective division also, right?
Any opinions about my OC? I'm a bit nervous since this is my first OC.
Nothing bad to say about it.
I have a question, Butei can take their chosen division with an elective division also, right?
That's if the student feels the need for complementary skills.
Icy.Tear
2011-06-05, 09:06
This is called an elective. Although the marks you earn in the elective will not be reflected on your total credits, but to be able to be a [Butei], one needs to have a variety of skills. A lot of students will move between classes, in an attempt to improve themselves.
Marcus H.
2011-06-05, 09:15
So for example, Assault members can: take Snipe electives for focus training and accuracy improvements; Logi electives to drive vehicles efficiently; and Informa electives to be knowledgeable in using technology.
I suspect that what Aria has been doing after completing her academic units is taking electives.
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-05, 09:35
Does your main spec affect what electives can you take? Or can you just go for all of them if you have the time?
Icy.Tear
2011-06-05, 09:38
In Butei High, students can choose an extra course at their leisure.
SaintessHeart
2011-06-05, 09:41
You see, while Athra's blade is meant to be a mystery relic speculated to be Caliburn or however you spell it (I've chosen Caledfwech), Adara L. Reiniger, whom I have said plays the role of Lancelot in the round table of warriors named X-Butei, was supposed to wield Lancelot's weapon of choice as a plot-driving upgrade. There can't be 2 Arondites.
Furthermore, if Rey turnsout to be the Lancelot descendent, it again conflicts with the fluff I have already written for Adara. The character's tension against Athra and her role in the AthraJimAdara triangle depends on it.
The simplest fix is that Lancelot somehow lost his weapon and its possesion ended up with a pianist, possibly leading up to Adara claiming that weapon later. Or as I suspect will be better if I take your character in place of Adara (saving the Nanoha OCers some grief as well, since Adara was based on an OC related to Lancelot there). But that would mean either I modify Rey's character or change the prologue and the plot direction of my fic. And it'll also mean she will be involved in a tragic Arthurian romance.
Options are open to any of the ways, just asking which would you prefer and ensuring that informed consent is made. :heh:
I once read in a book that all of the swords for the knights of the round table are from the Lady of the Lake, and I chose Aerondight over Galatine (Gawain's sword, the knight who inducted Lancelot into the round table) because of the history of Lancelot's adultery - making it the perfect way of the sword being said not to be meant for men. Also, I dropped Galatine after finding out that Gawain is a player. :heh:
Her name is taken from the Ar Tonelico series, where girls have magic in their voices. I was thinking of Fragarach, but it's background it too dry.
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-05, 09:52
I once read in a book that all of the swords for the knights of the round table are from the Lady of the Lake, and I chose Aerondight over Galatine (Gawain's sword, the knight who inducted Lancelot into the round table) because of the history of Lancelot's adultery - making it the perfect way of the sword being said not to be meant for men. Also, I dropped Galatine after finding out that Gawain is a player. :heh:
Her name is taken from the Ar Tonelico series, where girls have magic in their voices. I was thinking of Fragarach, but it's background it too dry.That doesn't explain anything. I still have no sword for Adara, or whether your character is in fact a descendent of Lancelot or Galahad.
Maybe Adara should get Galahad's sword, Gram instead. After all, before Keroko veto'd me, Noland did 'knock up' a certain 'dragon' to get his child. And to reflect Lancelot's player tendencies, his blade did not reach his legitimate descendent. :heh:
SaintessHeart
2011-06-05, 10:04
That doesn't explain anything. I still have no sword for Adara, or whether your character is in fact a descendent of Lancelot or Galahad.
Maybe Adara should get Galahad's sword, Gram the dragonslayer instead. After all, Noland did 'knock up' a certain 'dragon' to get his child. :heh:
Gram belongs to Siegfried, from the Norse myth where he slew the dragon Fafnir with it.
Out of all European myths, I hated Siegfried the most because he is way too overpowered, hard to tell a story like that. Even Beowulf got toasted by a dragon.
Galahad's sword had no name, but legends stated that it was a "destiny finder" - Galahad's pure heart enabled him to find the holy grail, which Aerondight's owner could only get a glimpse of.
More details of the Arthurian swords can be found here. (http://faculty.arts.ubc.ca/sechard/344swrd.htm) I am renaming the sword "Grace" - you can take Aerondight and the runes. :heh:
We should add more older characters.
Name : Reyvateil Rivia Tchaikovsky
Nationality: Polish, Russian/English Ancestry
Age : 19
Butei Rank: B
Ancestor: Pyotr Tchaikovsky, mysterious past ancestry
Department: Medica
Bloodline Ability: Gold eyes that are able to see in the dark, an ability to lower blood pressure and calm nerves through singing/chanting
Weapon: A silver-bladed sword named "Grace"
Friends: Ayari/Kanari, Karla, Reisen, Meikyo, Alicia
A fresh graduate from the French Butei Academy, she is under an internship as she intends to earn a medical license in the future. However, due to Ayari and Alicia's plan of setting up a "bungee-jumping" club in school, she was drawn into the fray as there will always be students injured during training despite all safety precautions.
Considered to be Meikyo's nurse and the school's health counselor, she has rather inhuman traits. She claims to be stuck at the age of 18 for the rest of her life because her cells do no deteriorate when sub-dividing, but she may suddenly die after the age of 40 due to an ancestral genetic disorder. Not only that, she is able to see perfectly in the dark without a light source or NV equipment.
The most mysterious thing is that she holds as a weapon : Grace. She says that the sword is not meant to be for men as "it is a symbol of beauty and gracefulness". True enough, it seems that the make and the construction of the sword is meant to be lightweight and having a thinner grip, more fit for a lady than a man, despite being tested to be from the middle ages. However, despite its age and supposed "flimsiness", it is still a sword of perfect quality, and in wind or rain, it is able to resonate sounds to confuse opponents from where the direction of the sword is coming from. Also, the silvered blade of the sword allows Reyva to redirect the sunlight into her opponent's eye, allowing her to close in with ease; at night or under low-light conditions, the sword swings leave afterimages to confuse opponents as to where the blade is coming from. The final unusual quality of the weapon, is despite its weight, it floats on water.
However, it seems that the blade may not originally be named as it is. When replacing the grip, Karla and Reisen had found a set of rune inscriptions on it spelling ᛚᛟᚻᛖᚾᚷᚱᛁᚾ, translated as "Lohengrin", the name of the legendary Knight of the Swans from the middle ages. How had the sword survived so long, and how did it end up in her hands? This is something that she doesn't know herself, other than it was handed to her by her parents in her second year in the French Butei Academy.
Outside of work, she is generally a carefree and gentle young lady, though she doesn't take sides when it comes to solving conflicts between people. She claims that the bungee jumping mystery is the first time she has ever taken a side as "the buffoon on the boat and the drunk party animal aren't doing their jobs as guardians of the two girls".
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-05, 10:15
Any opinions about my OC? I'm a bit nervous since this is my first OC.
I think You need to make your character stand out more; he's too normal. Give him a quirk or two, or put a new spin on a know stereotype.
Terminator98
2011-06-05, 12:34
Ze sniper.
http://img6.imageshack.us/img6/8632/zrshopx.th.jpg (http://img6.imageshack.us/i/zrshopx.jpg/)
With some shop work by LoweGear
Name: Tomomi Okamura
(Theoretical) VA: Mai Nakahara
Gender: Female
Age: 17
Height: 157cm
Division: Snipe (Assault as elective)
Butei Rank: A
Ancestor: A bit of an obscure German Wehrmacht sniper from World War II (her grandfather)
Equipment: Remington (http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v606/kct/Weapons/P1270012.jpg)Model 700PSS (http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v606/kct/Weapons/DSCN05940011.jpg) bolt-action rifle (long-action version), Glock 26 handgun, Simonich Raven Combat knife
Hehe, lots of snipers running around... Gonna be tough to decide who Alexandra's gonna employ whenever her team's gonna need one... I guess the friendlier the better. :smile:
Tohyama Kinji and my OC, Arisato Minato goes on their first mission (of sorts) which starts with a quick interrogation and ends in a fiery car chase! Quick oneshot and character introduction :D In case people forgot, this is what he looks like
http://img59.imageshack.us/img59/439/bc1a469863662e4edcf78a1.th.jpg (http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/59/bc1a469863662e4edcf78a1.jpg/)
For some reason, Minato's acting SO MUCH like Jason Statham in some of his movies... I don't know, I just have that image of that mean bad mofo out there kicking people's sorry butts... But yes, this is a younger version with more mercy. He's also smarter.
But the Persona Minato's gonna come and get you if he knows what you made him become... :uhoh:
I can't believe I'm doing this... but oh well. :eyespin:
Name: Kyouko Z. Akechi
http://i.imgur.com/7VcFWl.jpg (http://imgur.com/7VcFW)
Nicknames: Kyou-chan, Kyokkyun, Omawari-chan (Police-chan)
Gender: Female
Age: 16
Occupation: Butei High 1st year student
Butei Ranking: B
Eyes: Hazel
Hair: Brown, usually in a ponytail
Primary Department: Inquesta
Elective: Amdo
Usual wear: Butei uniform
Specialization: Criminal investigation and apprehension
Equipment:
1 modified Colt OHWS (Affectionately named the Aya Hiraga Custom, not that Kyouko ever uses the name)
A set of jitte (http://http://www.samurai-swords-for-sale.com/store/images/P/jitte.jpg) Here's a wiki about them (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Jitte_%28weapon%29)
Handcuffs. LOTS of them.
Theme Song: ‘一気に決めるゼ! (- Which is Decided at a Stroke!)’
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I die in moeness and charm. A MUST CHARACTER TO FEATURE FOR ANY FICS. :bow:
But yes... she looks familiar. (If it wasn't for Meister's shopping requests, could've changed her uniform color to the Tokyo Butei High one. Maybe after.)
Support character - The She-Wolf
http://img94.imageshack.us/img94/8987/kaedefujita.th.png (http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/94/kaedefujita.png/)
Kaede in her Sunday's clothes
Name: Kaede Fujita nicknamed The She-Wolf of Butei
(theorical) VA: Yukana
Nationality: Japanese
Age: 17
Class: 2nd Year
Butei Rank: A
Ancestor: Goro Fujita (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sait%C5%8D_Hajime)
Department: Inquesta (Assault elective)
Bloodline Ability: Atemporal Sight
Weapon: A katana and a M1911 pistol
Friends: Yves Brunet, Nene Otonashi and Yasmin Saif.
Another sword maiden, another rival. Plus she's got Laura Boedwig special mode. :eyespin:
But her fears and all... makes it weird for a wolf type character. Oh well, variation, variation! :nod:
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Now, concerning the other stuff.
Ok... to help the sword thing. There's also Almace (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Almace), another french sword that was given to Charlemagne, or Olivier's sword, Hauteclere (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hauteclere)
If you want magical swords all around, you also have the Vorpal (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Vorpal_sword)Sword. Being an unknown sword, you can just give it all the powers you want. :P
There's also Damocles sword that could signify terror...
In legendary swords, I already claim Crocea Mors, Julius Caesar's sword that was said to kill anyone with one hit... of course, what is this doing in a Butei's inventory... we're gonna see later. I also already claim a sword that has a fragment of Kusanagi (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kusanagi) in it... the unseen imperial treasure of Japan, and gives its wielder or exponentially enhances her wind powers.
Hell, here's a good list of legendary weapons: List Of Magical Weapons (Non Exhaustive) (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_magical_weapons)
Yeah... I'm overhauling all my OCs. The lead male OC and lead female OC also got their portrait changed, to something more... fitting. The story is welding itself together. The next post should contain all my updated OCs, as well as a prologue..
Any opinions about my OC? I'm a bit nervous since this is my first OC.
Looks good. As chaos said though, you might want to take some time and flesh his portrait out a bit more, make him more "unique".
But I myself keep overhauling my OCs so that they reach their uniqueness... so I shouldn't really be talking here... XD
Terminator98
2011-06-05, 13:19
Little spoiler of the upcoming modifications... home-made poster starring the two main chars, as well as the title that I finally came up with.
http://i.imgur.com/AiAxU.png
Yes, that's Alexandra's and Kyousuke's remade portraits. Much better fitting imo. :D
Name : Reyvateil Rivia Tchaikovsky
Her name is taken from the Ar Tonelico series, where girls have magic in their voices. I was thinking of Fragarach, but it's background it too dry.
I can't help but make this scene:
Revvy: kiafa hynne mea? pagle tes yor.
Amy: Are you going to answer?
Reyva: ... ... ...
I wonder if there is a sort of "addiction" to the powers of Irokane that removing it would cause withdrawal in a person?
Icy.Tear
2011-06-05, 14:22
Reki is no longer in contact with Ririirokane, yet she hears it as a voice in her head, giving her orders, manifested as "the wind". Whether this is the case with all Irokane is unconfirmed.
Reki is no longer in contact with Ririirokane, yet she hears it as a voice in her head, giving her orders, manifested as "the wind". Whether this is the case with all Irokane is unconfirmed.
I meant addiction / withdrawal - must have some brainfart that managed me to type in a completely different word.
FlameSparkZ
2011-06-05, 14:56
Her name is taken from the Ar Tonelico series, where girls have magic in their voices. I was thinking of Fragarach, but it's background it too dry.
Right...Fragarach's abilities vary depending on the story, from making those who have its blade pointed at their neck tell the truth, to being unstoppable by any armor, or even being able to control the wind.
As for owners, Lugh and Cú Chulainn are the ones I know of.
Well, there's always the sword of light, Claíomh Solais, which belonged to Nuadha the Silver Arm :D
Also, given this last episode, which revealed Jeanne D'Arc...makes one think what happened to Gille de Rais in that universe :rolleyes:
Did he know? Or was he fooled like everyone else? Eventually driven to madness and committing all those crimes :uhoh:
Cue a descendant who came to know of Jeanne's descendant and that wants to exact revenge for what her ancestor did to his :rolleyes:
*runs away*
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-05, 16:30
For some reason, Minato's acting SO MUCH like Jason Statham in some of his movies... I don't know, I just have that image of that mean bad mofo out there kicking people's sorry butts... But yes, this is a younger version with more mercy. He's also smarter.
But the Persona Minato's gonna come and get you if he knows what you made him become... :uhoh:
Jason Statham? Try Jeffrey Donovan ;)
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Anyway, the first part was just an act to scare the prisoners, the second is how he normally behaves. In the first place, the beauty of Persona's Minato's personality is that you can make it how ever you want him to be; if you're referring to the manga, he was too passive in that one for my taste- He doesn't even hug the girl!!
Terminator98
2011-06-05, 18:36
@Chaos: Was talking more about the manga, but yeah, the game's pretty open. I would've sworn though that out of all personalities, the one you gave him would've been one of the lasts I've lumped on him.
@Yoake: Where was the Rekki's irokane located already? Was it her earphones (I know that she listens to the sound of the wind in there... but didn't catch if it was the irokane or not).
Also, is it possible to have two Wind type irokanes? I have come up with a plot where the Kusanagi (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kusanagi) Sword is a wind type irokane that has been preserved for years... and my sword maiden actually has a fragment of it forged into her katana to improve her wind powers.
AND NOW... Main Male OC Over Haul OC Finished!
Allow me to present (re-present) you:
Yamato Kyousuke (https://docs.google.com/document/d/1pc8UCSJi5eI_CjXfBLsXLkgoPv6VYXf5TZ2DvEwlhxI/edit?hl=en_GB&authkey=CKH_jEc)
Comments and appreciations are always welcomed.
Next coming up is my main Female OC, overhauled as well, Yamato V.H. Alexandra.
P.S: Plus a preview of the last OC that I'll be adding probably...
Adolph Whitman
http://i.imgur.com/5o1lc.png
Icy.Tear
2011-06-05, 18:46
She does not carry it on her body. She came into contact with Irokane at her birthplace, and she separated from it after it awakened.
There are no element-Irokane, merely colour Irokane.
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-05, 18:47
Well my Arisato is relatively more talkative, but he's still the type of character that doesn't try too hard, everything comes naturally to him. Thats not to say nothing fazes him, just very little; he's the type to improvise.
If you recall his profile, he has the Eagle Vision from the bloodline of the Assassin's Creed.
Terminator98
2011-06-05, 19:06
Jah, I just read it again finishing the overhaul for my 1st OC... gonna redo my main girl now after I sleep. All the ideas are already in place... I just need the energy to weave everything together.
Comments and appreciations are welcome as always.
I decided to lump a bunch of the OCs here as fellow classmates of my own OCs. They'll all be in Tokyo Butei High Class B for 2nd Years (apparently, Kinji's in class A, so we'll at least already explain "WTH DUN I SEE YOUR OC IN THE CLASS?).
I'm already imagining Kyousuke having a flirt fest with Fiorenza... Minato and Gabriel discussing about the darkness of dagula... Asuka (gun-ho explosive user) arguing with Raimei what's the best way to blow up a tank, Yui and Aila discussing swordplay... but most of all, Kyouko wanting to arrest Kyousuke due to his Casanova attitude.
Times of fun ahead.
@Yoake: Interesting, might use this as some plot point for my own two irokane users... Glad to hear that Irokanes are based on color and not on elements... so the plan for the Kusanagi is a go I guess. (P.S; You're really doing your work just like that girl in your avatar does it... fine RL representation of her indeed. Can you make me an ice-cream plz? :D)
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-05, 19:57
^^ all while Chrysanthe is trying to figure out whether to hand her Class Rep position to either Athra or Gertrude. :heh:
Gram belongs to Siegfried, from the Norse myth where he slew the dragon Fafnir with it.
Out of all European myths, I hated Siegfried the most because he is way too overpowered, hard to tell a story like that. Even Beowulf got toasted by a dragon.Oops. :heh:
Galahad's sword had no name, but legends stated that it was a "destiny finder" - Galahad's pure heart enabled him to find the holy grail, which Aerondight's owner could only get a glimpse of.:nod:
Which reminds me, Arthur was no saint either. And even
More details of the Arthurian swords can be found here. (http://faculty.arts.ubc.ca/sechard/344swrd.htm) I am renaming the sword "Grace" - you can take Aerondight and the runes. :heh:Thanks, that saved me a bunch of headaches. :heh:
While the character is fine, the sword won't appear till later, until Adara's arc. That would be end of season 1 (episode 22-26):
X-Butei/Athra arc
Yanko + Manami + Gertrude + Kanagi + Haruna band filler
Chrysanthe arc
Elizabeth Adseard filler (+ No Hokago Kohi! appearance)
Gertrude arc
Isara filler
Adara arc (climax)
That's about... 6 novels worth of fics to write. :eyespin:
And then with the antagonists established this season, I can run for another 2 seasons, making it a total of 18 novels in all...
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-06, 00:31
Look, if you just need a Dragon-Slaying Sword; simply roll with ASCALON and be done with it :cool:
It was created on the idea of calculating out what precisely would be needed to slay the 50 foot long "Dragon of St. George" from the legend using only that one weapon. It is 3.5 metres long and weighs 200kg. It also possesses the following traits, though only one can be used at a time:
An axe-like thick blade to cleave at the sinews of the evil dragon.
A razor-like thin blade to cut away at the fat of the evil dragon.
A churchkey spike in the blade to tear off the scales of the evil dragon.
A fretsaw wire nestled on the blade to disembowel the evil dragon.
A giant saw on the back to severe the bones of the evil dragon.
A hook spike attached to the pommel to pull out the fangs of the evil dragon.
A close-combat spike near the grip to gouge out the nerves of the evil dragon.
...And a bunch of other hidden weapons within. Perfect for a crazy person like you :)
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-06, 05:05
Look, if you just need a Dragon-Slaying Sword; simply roll with ASCALON and be done with it :cool:
It was created on the idea of calculating out what precisely would be needed to slay the 50 foot long "Dragon of St. George" from the legend using only that one weapon. It is 3.5 metres long and weighs 200kg. It also possesses the following traits, though only one can be used at a time:
An axe-like thick blade to cleave at the sinews of the evil dragon.
A razor-like thin blade to cut away at the fat of the evil dragon.
A churchkey spike in the blade to tear off the scales of the evil dragon.
A fretsaw wire nestled on the blade to disembowel the evil dragon.
A giant saw on the back to severe the bones of the evil dragon.
A hook spike attached to the pommel to pull out the fangs of the evil dragon.
A close-combat spike near the grip to gouge out the nerves of the evil dragon.
...And a bunch of other hidden weapons within. Perfect for a crazy person like you :)Thankfully, no, the League of Extraordinary Butei don't need to slay a dragon. Perhaps not until the Reign of Fire arc in the London Underground of Aoike no Athra S2. :p
However, a tool of all trades fits the jack of all trades... Hmm...
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-06, 06:05
Thankfully, no, the League of Extraordinary Butei don't need to slay a dragon. Perhaps not until the Reign of Fire arc in the London Underground of Aoike no Athra S2. :p
However, a tool of all trades fits the jack of all trades... Hmm...
Iyaa～ In the first place, do you even have a character that can singlehandedly wield a 3.5m long, 200kg chunk of steel :heh:
SaintessHeart
2011-06-06, 06:17
Right...Fragarach's abilities vary depending on the story, from making those who have its blade pointed at their neck tell the truth, to being unstoppable by any armor, or even being able to control the wind.
As for owners, Lugh and Cú Chulainn are the ones I know of.
Well, there's always the sword of light, Claíomh Solais, which belonged to Nuadha the Silver Arm :D
I wanted a sword whose previous wielder had an association with being effeminate, or seems that the sword is not meant to be his. Claiomh Solais is about Neptune and his little land wife, didn't quite like god tales. :heh:
Which reminds me, Arthur was no saint either. And even
Well, according to a few texts I have read on MoB and MoF, Arthur came from a dysfunctional family. His mum married twice, and it is said that his half-sister Morgan Lefay is a bro-con - she likes Arthur and is jealous of Guinevere.
However, a tool of all trades fits the jack of all trades... Hmm...
Think about a gigantic SOG multitool with a hammerspace function. :D
Thanks, that saved me a bunch of headaches. :heh:
No problem. :heh: You're welcome to add-in my characters to your fics because I'll be pushing 12 hour shifts on a daily basis in my new FT job.
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-06, 06:36
Iyaa～ In the first place, do you even have a character that can singlehandedly wield a 3.5m long, 200kg chunk of steel :heh:A charm to match the might of a dragon.
Not to worry; the Ascalon carries itself!
Well, according to a few texts I have read on MoB and MoF, Arthur came from a dysfunctional family. His mum married twice, and it is said that his half-sister Morgan Lefay is a bro-con - she likes Arthur and is jealous of Guinevere.I know I just watched Denpa, but why did I just imagine Meme le Fay?! She's supposed to be my anti-heroine + arc-villainess!! :eyespin:
Think about a gigantic SOG multitool with a hammerspace function. :DI already have... :uhoh:
No problem. :heh: You're welcome to add-in my characters to your fics because I'll be pushing 12 hour shifts on a daily basis in my new FT job.This too. :D
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-06, 07:40
Think about a gigantic SOG multitool with a hammerspace function. :D
Lol, what hammerspace functions :p ? Everything is all there.
http://images2.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20100328043830/to-aru-majutsu-no-index/images/thumb/f/f0/Acqua.jpg/465px-Acqua.jpg (http://toarumajutsunoindex.wikia.com/index.php?title=Acqua_of_the_Back&image=Acqua-jpg)
However, a tool of all trades fits the jack of all trades... Hmm...
Symbolically, you can use it to do other things like for example
Sinews = Strength, therefore used to weaken the Enemy's stamina
Scales = Armor, therefore used to break the enemy's defense
Fangs = Weapon, therefore used to disarm your enemy
Nerves = Control, therefore used to paralyze the enemy
Support Character - The Cute and Shy Nerd
http://img88.imageshack.us/img88/9571/neneotonashi.th.jpg (http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/88/neneotonashi.jpg/)
Pic by Tony Taka
Photoshop modification by LoweGear
Name: Nene Otonashi
(theorical) VA: Kaori Shimizu (Hiyori Tamura's voice range in Lucky Star)
Nationality: Japanese
Age: 16
Class 2nd year
Butei Rank: A (close to S)
Ancestor: Nobody famous.
Department: Repier
Bloodline Ability: None
Weapon: Walter PPK, Benchmade Model 860 Bedlam folding knife (http://www.tactical-life.com/online/tactical-knives/mean-street-bedlam/).
Friends: Yves Brunet, Kaede Fujita, Yasmin Saif, Sanae Noriaki and Naoko Kazami (those two only as online acquaintances).
Character Quotes:
"Wah! What! What are you going to do with the rope you asked for? Are you going to do xxxx or xxxx to me?!"
Background:
Other than the fact she have been raised in a very strict family of christian japanese people, living in Okinawa a hundred of meters away from the NCIS Okinawa offices, Nene is what anyone would call a shy nerd girl with an above average intellect. Since a young age, she have developed for a love for science and crime dramas. Needless to say that watching procedural and forensic shows such as Unsolved Mysteries, CSI, Bones and NCIS have nurtured this love. This have come to the point she have wanted to be a part of this kind of fun, using science to help to solve crimes or disasters. As a result, she have focused on her studies for that goal. However, her parents have had other plans for her and the future have been looking dire for her, until her aunt from Tokyo have come to visit them and seen what Nene could do. She have then proposed to take Nene with her to Tokyo, under the condition that she yields good results in her new school, this school being Tokyo High Butei. Transfered there, she have shown to be quite competent and the teams who have worked with her have been very satisfied, but they also noted that Nene is lacking in the relational side of the deal. This is something she is trying to fix.
Personality:
Nene is a shy girl as a result of her very strict upbringing, not helped by the fact that she have an older brother who is very successful in life in the financial sector and have been able to rebound from the recent financial worldwide crisis. As a result, she have made very few friends in real life and instead resorted to online social networks, such as 2ch, Facebook or chat programs to befriend some more. This, combined with the finding of her father's porn collection at a young age, have caused her to construct a more liberated and unrestrained online persona who would indulge in various fetishes. Yes, under that shy girl shell lies someone very knowledgeable in questionable areas. One can witness the results of this cocktail, shy girl with weak real life social skills added up with perverse online persona, her tendency to take the most harmless sentences out of context and spin it in the more questionable ways. This is one of the few things that people working with her have noted and hoped that she would correct. Kinji who have meet her during his first year have been annoyed, Jin and Preston are those who have found it rather amusing. Her aunt, more liberal than Nene's parents, have been working to make her niece a little more confident, notably getting her joining the tennis and swimming clubs of Butei High, and working in a maid cafe, the same as Kirsty and Jin, during the Friday and Saturday evenings.
Ability:
None
Style:
She is another of those non-combatant Butei who regularly takes classes in Assault to better themselves. During those occasions, she is one of those who get scolded.
Trivia
*She have a tendency to blush a lot, this being enough to have annoyed Kinji.
*She draws pretty well and have published a few doujinshi under a pen name, she also have been using her aunt as her representative since she would not dare to meet the few fans she have had.
*Resulting of her drawing skills, she have written and drawn lemon short stories involving various Butei students, hetero, homo, bi, couple, threesome or foursome, anything and anyone goes as long as she have witnessed a particular event involving the parties. Victims of her fantasies so far are Kinji x Aria x Shirayuki, Jim x Kirsty, Amélie x Sanae, Fiorenza x Rachel Lee, Kyouko x Riko, Jin x Erin, Svetlana x Tomomi and many more. Needless to day that those featured in Nene's fics would be in one hell of a day if they ever read them. Nene naturally does her best to hide those.
*She is a repeat victim of Fio's "skinship".
*Under the influence of her aunt, she have dated Ryoushi. Let's say that the date have been quite uneventful because of their respective personalities.
*From what her aunt have told, it is dangerous to give Nene alcohol. This lift her inhibitions and can lead to rather traumatizing experiences.
Author's note
Nene is the last of the nerd girls trio (Sanae, Naoko and herself), if Sanae is the caustic one, Naoko the cool and sociable one, Nene is the shy of the trio.
Her creation have been rather chaotic in my mind. Firstly, I intended her to be a descendant of the father of forensic sciences, Vidocq (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Eug%C3%A8ne_Fran%C3%A7ois_Vidocq), but I refrained because, first, I estimated there are enough people with famous ancestors in my roster as it is, lastly because I feared that whoever, either someone else or I, eventually tries to write her may not succeed into making her look the part. Then, I have wanted to base a character on Abby Sciuto (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Abby_Sciuto), only to realize that Abby is too cool so I may fail short. Also, I have needed to find the right pic that would fit, those in danbooru under the "original + labcoat" search have yielded results that have gone like this "Too big. Too small. Too modest. Too slutty. OOoooooh that one is just right." Yes, this picture by Tony Taka have been the one I have chosen. Then, the need to give a personality to the character. This one is as weird one, I have very loosely based it on the online persona of someone named wanwan combined with the ability of some people to take anything out of context and misinterpret the most mundane line as something totally questionable, "that" kind of questionable. So here we have this bespetacled shrinking violet with a closet pervert quirk.
Last one in line
Yasmin
http://img263.imageshack.us/img263/2685/yasminportrait.jpg
Characters so far
Kirsten Vikernes (Assault)
Preston Lee Whitworth (Medica) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3612129#post3612129)
Amelie D'Artagnan (Inquista)
Fiorenza Diotallevi (Logi)
Sanae Noriaki (Amdo) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3619064#post3619064)
Jin Yamazaki (SSR) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3622879#post3622879)
Svetlana Dragovic (Snipe) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3623641#post3623641)
Naoko Kazami (Connect) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3624161#post3624161)
Erin Dee Kirishima (Informa) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3624419#post3624419)
Kentaro Murasame (Amdo) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3631836#post3631836)
Yves Brunet (Assault) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3636594#post3636594)
Kaede Fujita (Inquesta) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3638473#post3638473)
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-06, 09:19
I did consider that, but the implications of...
A churchkey spike in the blade to tear off the scales of the evil dragon.
...then becomes a new way to destroy Butei 'Walking Churches'? :eyespin:
For the character I'm cannibalizing it for, he's a handyman and an hardcore improviser. With the Ascalon instead of being sequestered but modified and upgraded over the ages, the modern Buteirized weapon is obscenely-large multi-part blade. As it grew larger and heavier, a charm was added to the blade to offset the mass. As it became stained with more dragon blood, a shroud was included to hide from the nose of the evil dragon, rendering it invisible and intangible when unused. Each component is pulled out of the blade with a sorting chant, inspired by the list above.
I think the core of Aria's world is fapping to weaponry both guns and ancient. Guess I'll specialize in ancient relics while the experts handle the guns. So I'll arm Chrysanthe with a Papyrus Sceptor of Isis, and Manami with... flintlock pistols and pirate-style sabres? :twitch: Handcannon? :twitch::twitch:
I need a better idea here...
Wild Goose
2011-06-06, 11:05
I find it amusing - sorta - that you've forgotten about Rachel and Michelle; I think the only other person who's made note of them has been Sheba. :p
There's Yukio the ABJ hoon too.
Wild Goose
2011-06-06, 11:21
Oops. I'd forgotten about him too.
If Jon doesn't want or need to drive, he might just get Derek to ferry everybody around. Though given that Jon's vehicle of choice is a 1985 Toyota Land Cruiser BJ60, due to having grown up in that particular vehicle, and having found that it's quite useful for transporting a fully armed squad of Butei in SWAT gear...
Terminator98
2011-06-06, 11:38
Wait a second... I thought that I had scoured the entire thread for every single OC... my eyes are tired... Let me go get em.
This is quite a herculean task. I know because I have come up with those posts about how my OCs, until the last five ones, could interact with most of them. Keyword being most, =/= all.
It's okay. Everyone's forgotten the Butei Masters I posted.
It's okay. Everyone's forgotten the Butei Masters I posted.
You meant Coach and D-Boy? I have not forgotten them. And also the three sisters.
Terminator98
2011-06-06, 12:40
I'd swear that Rachel and Michelle were in that list. I did take note of em... must've gotten lost in the copy/pasting endeavors.
Also, noted about Derek.
Gonna edit and add em to the list... a little snippet that came up in my mind, between Lucie (the half dragon girl) and Derek
Bullets were ricocheting all around them. Derek and Lucie were under heavy fire from the crime lord's henchmen.
The situation was grim, cut off from the car by the thugs, there was no way for Derek and his CVR protegee to escape, plus the crates wouldn't hold up much longer against the hail of 9mm bullets that were raining down on them.
Derek: Oi girl... can't you defend yourself? We're rather screwed here... These 10 guys are tough... I'm not sure if I can take em down by myself.
Lucie: Can't we get away? Your car's right here isn't it?
It seemed that his colleague failed to grasp the gravity of the situation.
Derek: ... if you forgot missie... we're actually trying to get to the car... but these 10 guys that are currently shooting us are preventing us from reaching it...
Lucie: What about backup?
Derek: Well, they're taking their time, and we can't really rely on them right now...
Another bullet grazed Derek's blazer. it was only a matter of seconds before him and Luci would be mince meat.
Suddenly, Lucie rose up. From the beginning, she had the eyes of a little terrified girl. Yukio was then wondering what the hell was such a person doing in CVR. But now, the gleam in her eyes was different. It was solemn, determined and grave.
What had just happned? Was she accepting her death? No, there was a form of determination in these eyes, the will to fight...
Lucie: What I am going to do here... it's strictly confidential... please Yukio-san... don't tell anyone what you're about to see. I'm not supposed to reveal myself like that.
Derek: Eh? What are you going to do? Strip and offer yourself to them? Might work yes, but I'm in no way letting you get raped. Stay here, I'll fight them.
He replied in an incredulous voice. What was such a little and frail girl going to do against ten well armed and trained criminals? Derek took out his throwing knives and readied himself for the battle.
He was stopped though by a sudden flash of light enveloped the entire room. Soon, he was about to take his words back.
-----
The hangar was now quiet, with the smell of gunpowder floating in the air. Finally, the thugs had been knocked unconscious and were all laying on the floor, nicely handcuffed.
Derek: What the hell was that... you've got a damn big crocodile thingie in your pocket missie...
Lucie: Ah... apologies Yukio-san if I scared you...
Derek: No, not at all. In fact, I like crocodiles. Heh.
Derek smiled. He did not know what else to do... That "thing" he had just seen... what on earth was that creature?
And thus starts my concoction for a new SSR student... YES.
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So, still no love for vamps goose? XD Even dracula daughter's popped in now...
My Logi guy is gonna to try to be a badass normal... all while being the descendant of a WWII Tank Ace... (King Tigers airdropped in Tokyo anyone?)
Whoo... lots of stuff to do...
It's okay. Everyone's forgotten the Butei Masters I posted.
One hasn't read my posts carefully...
They haven't been forgotten Tempy. :D
You put them down as cameos. That's as much as they've amounted so far.
Terminator98
2011-06-06, 12:59
yes, but in no way are they forgotten.
Actually, the cameo thing might be more reserved to the serious teachers. D-Boy might actually be one of the recurring teachers of class 2-B... cause I just re-read his profile, and I prefer him over the two others (who are closer to real drill instructors, but yeah... )
*sees that his rather mediocre list is also being ignored as well*
oh well, as expected as always
*goes back to thinking*
Terminator98
2011-06-06, 13:40
Saint X... I'm tired of browsing through 400+ posts... link to em OCs plz?
P.S: Added a few people to the list (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=3641410&postcount=397)... added the Dragon Girl's name... soon to add the other CVR girls...
Support character - Green-Eyed Tall Dark Bishoujo from an Unusual Ground
http://img199.imageshack.us/img199/3320/yasminsaif.th.jpg (http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/199/yasminsaif.jpg/)
Name: Yasmin bint Muhammad bin Kareem Saif, just shortened to Yasmin Saif beyond her family or people of her ethnicity.
(theorical) VA: Yuko Goto (Junko Kaname's voice range)
Nationality: Brazilian (of Egyptian immigrants)
Age: 17
Class: 2nd Year
Butei Rank: B (close to reach A)
Ancestor: Nobody of note
Department: Lezzad (Assault elective)
Bloodline Ability: None
Weapon: Taurus PT92 (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Taurus_PT92), FAMAS and recon 1 combat folding knife (http://deadliestwarrior.wikia.com/wiki/Recon-1_Knife).
Friends: Naoko Kazami, Yves Brunet, Kaede Fujita and Nene Otonashi. And Sanae Noriaki (acquaintance and troll for hire).
Character Quotes:
"My brother transfered me here because he thought that I would be safer. Honestly, I think that it is the equivalent of forcing me in easy mode."
Background:
In Tokyo High, Yasmin is a bit of a exotic curiosity. Born in Brazil, from couple of immigrants from Egypt, and a muslim. Her father is a professor in archeology, who moved to Brazil out of passion for the ancient civilizations in latin america, her mother is an engineer in the oil industry whose competences have proved to be precious to those who have transfered her in Brazil. Yasmin herself is the third children of a family of four siblings, her block being next to the favelas, the children have witnessed and experienced some of the harsher aspects of life in Rio. From this experience, they have gotten frustration, but from this frustration, they have gained the will to make their lives and others' better. The oldest have become a lawyer. The second oldest have joined the police, then BOPE and eventually the Brazil Butei High as instructor after having receiving a wound that have caused the loss of his left eye. It's unsure what are the reasons who have pushed Yasmin to take lessons that would enable her to join the Butei school network, but her second brother is possibly one of the reasons. Before joining the network, she have dated a young man from the japanese community of brazil and enjoyed a fairly good time. Hearing about his wish to return to his grandparents' homeland, Yasmin have sworn to follow and protect him whever he goes. Her brothers have made it clear to her that they don't approve this relationship. But being in her rebellious teenager phase, she have not listened to them and have followed her boyfriend to Japan. While her intructor brother does not approve of her relationship, he have reasoned that transfering his sister to Tokyo should put her in a safer place than Brazil (field students in Brazil have experienced a higher casualty rate due to the dangers they are dealing with). Unfortunately, her brothers' bad feelings have proved to be right when Yasmin's boyfriend have dumped her a few weeks after the transfer. This have severely embittered her and she have worked solo the next weeks, until she have worked with a nice Connect girl named Naoko Kazami. A friendship flourished between the two girls when Naoko have managed to get through Yasmin's embittered shell. As a result, she slowly have tried to open up to others, but this have proved to be harder because of Yasmin's severe facade. However, three people have read through this facade and offered her their friendship, a frenchman named Yves, two japanese respectively named Kaede and Nene. It is Yves' aura of nobility that drawn Yasmin to the small group. All of them would become a well-performing group and Yasmin have later gotten over her unfortunately teenager love. As far as her specialization goes, she is studying organized crime and terrorism.
Personality:
Strict, proud, short temper, harsh toward herself, those are the four things that could describe Yasmin. People usually finds her hard to approach, but those who does and works with her have been happy to work with someone dedicated to the objectives. Naoko, Nene, Kaede and Yves are amoung the few people to have found a softer side of Yasmin. There is indeed few things that makes her mentally and emotionally melt, namely cute animals and plushies.
Ability:
None
Style:
Yasmin is a combat pragmatist, she is the kind to bring a knife in a brawl and a gun in a knife fight. At long and middle range, she will just resort to shoot to disable, at close range, she will get her knife out and fight "dirty". Like Fio, hitting where it hurts, throwing dirt in the eyes and emptying the content of a fire extinguisher in the face, i.e, are perfectly valid options for her. She can be accused to be "non elegant" and "not having a sense of aesthetic" but she just don't care. This is the result of close combat training under the harsh teaching of her former-BOPE brother.
Trivia
*Having seen Kinji in HSS mode, she just shrug him off as a flirt boy.
*She thinks lowly of Preston and other womanizers.
*However, Saito have been one of the few to have made her laugh and one of the few boys she could get along with.
*She don't like Shirayuki, the girl representing those she herself got dumped for.
*She thinks Fiorenza is a fool with no sense of self-respect.
*She have been thinking of a physical retribution against her former boyfriend, but she have decided to resort to Sanae's services for "trolling" and pay her. She owes Sanae a favor as a result.
*She treasures a Bonta-kun plushie offered as a token of friendship by Naoko.
*She is also a closet otaku, who indiscriminately watches mecha and shoujo anime. Her recent favorite is Macross Frontier.
*Yasmin is another of those excellent cooks. This is "balanced" by her bad skills at singing, much to her shame.
*Speaking of food, she absolutely loves takoyaki and okonomiyaki.
*She is a fan of HK era Jackie Chan movies.
*She owns and rides a Yamaha YZF-R6 bike.
Author's note
Another odd OC idea of mine. I wanted to base a character on Ziva David, but on the other side of the Gaza stripe, meaning muslim instead of jewish. Firstly, I have wanted a descendant of Saladin, but for the same reason as Nene I scratched the idea and I am glad I did. The decision to make her a brazilian, from egyptian parents, have come from memories of the movie Tropa de Elite and a rewatch of City of God, also a couple of people recently talking about it. That unfortunate love story of hers have been made up as justification for her bitter, and rather unapproachable, self. Now, can I say I am satisfied with the result? sort of. I think I have reached my aim for her, without resorting to the special ancestor card.
No more OCs from me! I hope... Inspiration is such a fickle mistress.
All of my characters
Kirsten Vikernes (Assault)
Preston Lee Whitworth (Medica) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3612129#post3612129)
Amelie D'Artagnan (Inquesta)
Fiorenza Diotallevi (Logi)
Sanae Noriaki (Amdo) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3619064#post3619064)
Jin Yamazaki (SSR) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3622879#post3622879)
Svetlana Dragovic (Snipe) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3623641#post3623641)
Naoko Kazami (Connect) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3624161#post3624161)
Erin Dee Kirishima (Informa) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3624419#post3624419)
Kentaro Murasame (Amdo) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3631836#post3631836)
Yves Brunet (Assault) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3636594#post3636594)
Kaede Fujita (Inquesta) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3638473#post3638473)
Nene Otonashi (Repier) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3641340#post3641340)
Yasmin Saif (Lezzad) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3641692#post3641692)
SaintessHeart
2011-06-06, 18:53
flintlock pistols and pirate-style sabres? :twitch:
Ayari/Kanari. Descendants of pirates, daughters of the Yakuza families, R&J style.
Reisen became their impromptu guardian after doing "pre-emptive protection" for the girls (i.e killing their would-be assassins) while Karla feeds them. So much for being "irresponsible". :heh:
Reisen : No, I am doing my job of taking care of them; by surreptitiously removing those poor bastards from existence. I have been overpaid a good lump sum, my disappearance was arranged for, and I did my job waxing most of them, therefore I don't see the need to plan for the girls' future well-being.
Karla : At least help me out! One of them is a reckless adventurer, while the other is an otaku! How can I even set them on the right course in their life?
Reisen : It's still not my problem.
Handcannon? :twitch::twitch:
Desert Eagle .50AE. The action express rounds should open up holes real nice in Aramid plates.
Add a 10-inch barrel and you get Leon S. Kennedy's signature anti-boss weapon. :D
I need a better idea here...
You could go with the Jericho 941 .41AE, or the Barak SP21. :heh:
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-06, 19:34
Kha... DRAGONS? REALLY?
NO DRAGONS. I mean, REALLY.
The 'dragon' Noland knocked up? That was a nickname that referred to the "Palmtop Dragon", a fiery girl from the previous generation of Butei, in the early 1980s. The whole Ascalon legend was taken lock stock and barrel from Saint George and the Dragon, with a lot of Kamachi spice added. And that last bit about Reign of Fire is just for lolz; me and Chaos loved to do our 2 man crack smoking since our days back in Nanoha OC.
Don't panic! Its just all useless vaporware. :heh:
I think that this is a bit too far fetched for Aria... especially seeing that your X-Man team has already gone quite far into breaking the limits... XDThis is where I must insert the compulsory comment: You're the 3rd last person I want to hear this from! :p
I accept your impression still. When I started Aria I had no idea what I wanted to do. So I went ahead with The League of Extraordinary Gentlemen, which was inspired by all the descendents of historic characters in canon. By focusing on SSR, I began with my version of Jenne (Athra Pendragon Nakamura), my version of Shirayuki (Chrysanthe Spyridoula Cleopatra CMLXXXIII), sprinkle with werewolf-pirate, then a valkyrja, a super-soldier thrown in, some magick...
It was while researching Arthurian legend did a story actually begin to form. That led to all the brohaha about the Nameless Sword, unsealing it by fulfilling the conditions, which involved forming a giant team and gunning for class rep. It led to the elevation of Jim Bean to protagonist status, and the creation of Adara Lancelot Reiniger to complete the setting of a tragic romance.
At the same time, the thread became so much more florid, with characters and active members everywhere. Even teachers! It was a surprise; I created Prof Chen Fong Xie to be homeroom teacher, but soon after that I felt someone else would do a better job. I threw out Quade, too many Assault, so see ya Deadpool! Morrigan Aensland's descendent got fired; I had so many CVRs to employ I simply didn't need her. Jim became Lezzad instead of Inquesta, being the spy he is. And Mr Stark is facing retrenchment too.
Lastly, I was reminded of a comment I made about Aria back when it was still a 1-thread thing: weapons emphasis. Guns and ancient relics were center stage. That has shifted my emphasis of character background and plot-driving. Right now, I'm in closed beta testing of the 8 girls + 1, rebalancing to the levels I see in Shirayuki VS Jeanne. And I'm going through that list you made, and its helping me put my thoughts into perspective.
All this means that most of the early profiles posted are already obsolete by 3-4 versions. What you see will not be what you get. So before you write them off, watch this space. :uhoh:
However... I've been thinking of a Dragon Type OC in SSR... she would complete the team perfectly. I'm basing her on Fire Emblem types of Dragon-Humans... for further details:
Manaketes (http://fireemblem.wikia.com/wiki/Manakete)
She could very well be a member of the X-Butei... seeing her special abilities. In fact, my whole OC fast should be somewhere in a place that is related to X-Butei, seeing that they're all SSR related (save two, which are normals, but seeing that they're part of the team...). Of course Meister, that's in your fic, so feel free.
On my own side though... she'll mainly be human most of the time... dragon powers are... FORBIDDEN. (Unless all your friends are about to get killed). :eyespin:
I see... I actually lumped her with Kyousuke in my head, forming a 2nd squad capable of SSR missions. More comments when I have time......... >.<
And now... this is most probable what's gonna be class 2-B In Tokyo Butei High.
Ok... so far for my plans of class B...
It is split into teams... yes, I came up with a fictional one. The class in itself is pretty tightly knit, and they tend to help each other pretty often. And have a good sense of solidarity
Teachers: Cannon Ones. Also, Doc, Coach and D.Boy might make a cameo or two. Actually, D.Boy will be more than cameos I think... I like his character.
---Alexandra's team / Kyousuke's harem---
Yamato Kyousuke (Assault)
Yamato V.H Alexandra (Repier/Inquesta)
Gabriel Michaelis (Dagula/Lezzad)
Miyamoto Yui (Connect)
Azai Asuka (Assault/Medica)
Adolph Whitman (Logi/Amdo)
Hisako Lucie (SSR/CVR)
---Minato and his Harem---
Minato Arisato (Dagula)
Saito (Informa)
Ryoushi (Snipe)
Fuyumi Raimei (Assault)
Ada (CVR)
Siesta (SSR)
---The Virgins of... Justice?---
Aila W. Cairns (Assault)
Elise Kujou (Inquesta)
Kyoukou Z. Akechi (Inquesta/Amdo)
Alice V. Primrose (Informa)
Tomomi Okamura (Snipe)
---The Guy that Jumps from Group to Group---
Jin Yamazaki (SSR)
---J.Davis SWAT Assault Team---
Jon. W Davis (Assault)
Rachel Lee Wei Ying (Assault)
Michelle H. "Meat" Winters (Assault)
Yukio “Derek” Yamakawa (Logi)
---Preston and his female suite---
Kirsten Vikernes (Assault)
Preston Lee Whitworth (Medica)
Amélie D'Artagnan (Inquista)
Fiorenza Diotallevi (Logi)
Sanae Noriaki (Amdo)
---The Moe Trinity---
Svetlana Dragovic (Snipe)
Naoko Kazami (Connect)
Erin Dee Kirishima (Informa)
---Inspector Adrian and co.---
Adrian Fletcher (Inquesta)
Viktor Hauptman (Assault)
Charlotte Johnson (Logi)
Kou Kusanagi (Connect)
The current version, Jim Bean is a freelance Butei who used to have more time on his hand but lately gets dragged off by Athra a lot. He has refused time and again to join her Round Table, because he prefers to cherrypick interesting contracts from other Butei. Like Jin, he is colorless, and moves from group to group, working across classes as well. Besides the licence to chill, Bean is a hopeless normal that gets the job done by the skin of his teeth.
I suppose he goes into that other mobile guy category. :heh: Full details when his overhaul is complete.
CONCERNING THE X-BUTEI: They're just class 2-C in my own fic... Having that professor thing and all that magical thingie is too much... they'll be there for comic relief (maybe some plot can be gotten from em though... they're SSR after all)For the most part, the X-Butei are a self-contained group with their own plot and progress. And I understand that too; Choutei should deal with choutei after all. The X-Butei is my medium to go full on into Supernatural Searching Research, and you see that in their plot arcs. Every time its about Something Strange in the Neighbourhood, or else its a sequel to Arthurian legend. So while their level of OPness is being reduced, the theme of seeking the paranormal will not. That alone will alienate them, which is a theme that they struggle with metafictionally. Even freaks want to have friends.
I don't mind if you can't use them. The only contradiction here is that I tried to put them, your characters, chaos and sheba's into 1 class, and ran out of space. My planned class roster would eventually look just like yours, + Jim and Nemo, + the X-Butei, + Ookami Ryou and Akari Aoko to Minato's team, dropping the inactive characters to "recurring from other classes." I called the class A Certain Butei Class to avoid getting canon-fired, but that's my preference for this world.
So yeah, watch this space. If nothing changes then, I'll just keep on sandboxing. :heh:
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I apologize for not reviewing the latest characters; I have exams due and I can't find the time to do it properly beyond scanning...
After thursday, be ready for a BACKLOG BREAKER. And of course, the open beta release of Athra of the Blue Lake!
SaintessHeart
2011-06-06, 21:52
Listing my characters :
Ayari/Kanari Unamichi (SSR-Assault / SSR-Lezzard) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3610993#post3610993)
Karla Bidan/Reisen (Logi / ex-Dagula) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3620070#post3620070)
Meikyo (CVR) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3621177#post3621177)
Alicia Capone (CVR) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3628422#post3628422)
Reyvateil Rivia Tchaikovsky (Medica) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=3639219#post3639219)
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-07, 01:02
I'm an idiot! I'm such an idiot!!!
Iyaa～ In the first place, do you even have a character that can singlehandedly wield a 3.5m long, 200kg chunk of steel :heh:Who's the muscles of the team? Who's the monstrous loli? Who's the one said to flip tanks and chase cheetahs? And who's the one missing a weapon?!
SUZUMENO MANAMI.
Because it is lol that a 145cm girl can lug around a blade 5 times her mass and 2.5 times her height--
*is staring down the business end of Ascalon*
--I mean a 225cm transformed wolfgirl can handle the Ascalon easily, and represents her dominion over supernatural creatures... :heh: Now... :heh: Put that away... :heh:
Desert Eagle .50AE. The action express rounds should open up holes real nice in Aramid plates.
Add a 10-inch barrel and you get Leon S. Kennedy's signature anti-boss weapon. :DThis will be Manami's compulsory handgun then, for when Ascalon is just overkill. :D
Ayari/Kanari. Descendants of pirates, daughters of the Yakuza families, R&J style.Also, contracted as crew for Manami. :D
Gonna edit and add em to the list... a little snippet that came up in my mind, between Lucie (the half dragon girl) and Derek
Bullets were ricocheting all around them. Derek and Lucie were under heavy fire from the crime lord's henchmen.
The situation was grim, cut off from the car by the thugs, there was no way for Derek and his CVR protegee to escape, plus the crates wouldn't hold up much longer against the hail of 9mm bullets that were raining down on them.
Derek: Oi girl... can't you defend yourself? We're rather screwed here... These 10 guys are tough... I'm not sure if I can take em down by myself.
Lucie: Can't we get away? Your car's right here isn't it?
It seemed that his colleague failed to grasp the gravity of the situation.
Derek: ... if you forgot missie... we're actually trying to get to the car... but these 10 guys that are currently shooting us are preventing us from reaching it...
Lucie: What about backup?
Derek: Well, they're taking their time, and we can't really rely on them right now...
Another bullet grazed Derek's blazer. it was only a matter of seconds before him and Luci would be mince meat.
Suddenly, Lucie rose up. From the beginning, she had the eyes of a little terrified girl. Yukio was then wondering what the hell was such a person doing in CVR. But now, the gleam in her eyes was different. It was solemn, determined and grave.
What had just happned? Was she accepting her death? No, there was a form of determination in these eyes, the will to fight...
Lucie: What I am going to do here... it's strictly confidential... please Yukio-san... don't tell anyone what you're about to see. I'm not supposed to reveal myself like that.
Derek: Eh? What are you going to do? Strip and offer yourself to them? Might work yes, but I'm in no way letting you get raped. Stay here, I'll fight them.
He replied in an incredulous voice. What was such a little and frail girl going to do against ten well armed and trained criminals? Derek took out his throwing knives and readied himself for the battle.
He was stopped though by a sudden flash of light enveloped the entire room. Soon, he was about to take his words back.
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The hangar was now quiet, with the smell of gunpowder floating in the air. Finally, the thugs had been knocked unconscious and were all laying on the floor, nicely handcuffed.
Derek: What the hell was that... you've got a damn big crocodile thingie in your pocket missie...
Lucie: Ah... apologies Yukio-san if I scared you...
Derek: No, not at all. In fact, I like crocodiles. Heh.
Derek smiled. He did not know what else to do... That "thing" he had just seen... what on earth was that creature?
And thus starts my concoction for a new SSR student... YES.Manami and her are going to be great friends. At least much more than a certain vampire, now that I've dropped vampire-pirates from my line-up, there's nothing to mitigate Suzumeno's nose for bloodsuckers. :uhoh:
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So, after this post of green doggie loving (:uhoh:), the last bit of weirdness from smoking Chaos crack comes to pass, thankfully.
Let's. Get. Serious. :D
SaintessHeart
2011-06-07, 06:03
This will be Manami's
Actually that gun is still an overkill with the round it fires. At close to 2kJ of energy, chances of inducing a hydrostatic shock would be quite high. :heh:
You could use the Jericho 941 for sizedown if it kicks like a bull. Or go with a standard Beretta, Browning or SIG pistol.
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-07, 09:00
Actually that gun is still an overkill with the round it fires. At close to 2kJ of energy, chances of inducing a hydrostatic shock would be quite high. :heh:
You could use the Jericho 941 for sizedown if it kicks like a bull. Or go with a standard Beretta, Browning or SIG pistol.Problem with those other pistols is that they are a little small for werewolf hands. :heh:
XIX deagle with .50 rounds it is. Goes with the "compensating for size" pattern she has going for her (in her human form). She doesn't use it that often anyway. :uhoh:
Btw, Manami wears special stretchable uniform (like Stella from Bridge x Bridge) so that when she transforms she doesn't tear her clothes... Sorry to disappoint you perverts out there, no free Eclair show. :p
EDIT: You guys fail. We have so many snipe, but they all have the same personality (almost). Here was I looking for a cute female sniper who squeaks PEW with each shot and I find none! :heh:
EDIT2: I just had an idea. I'll genderbend and tame gunblade23's Snipe. Perfect.
Wild Goose
2011-06-07, 09:42
*facepalms*
Kha, the very nature of the work of sniping, requiring quiet intense focus, means that naturally genki and loudmouthed people do not gravitate to this job.
IRL Shifty Powers, best shot in Easy Company, was a quiet and humble fellow. Gordon and Shugart quietly and calmly went about their work and made their last stand with little fanfare, merely silent determination.
Even in fiction, we see that most snipers tend to be quiet professionals, not large ham hotblooded shouting blood knights. There are perhaps only 2 cheerful snipers that stand out to me: Kurz Weber, from Full Metal Panic, and Chuck Mckenzie,the No Celebrities Were Harmed expy of ranking Marine sniper Chuck Mawhinney, from Stephen Hunter's I, Sniper. Both were cheerful wisecracking snipers, and both knew when to drop the clown act when it was time to get serious. Mckenzie in particular spends the book appearing as a jocular, friendly fellow... and then in the climatic shootout drops 3 ex-SAS troopers without a word, all calm focus and skill.
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-07, 09:55
EDIT: You guys fail. We have so many snipe, but they all have the same personality (almost). Here was I looking for a cute female sniper who squeaks PEW with each shot and I find none! :heh:
EDIT2: I just had an idea. I'll genderbend and tame gunblade23's Snipe. Perfect.
My main character dislike cute sniper girls; arguing that they're the hardest to deal with :heh:
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-07, 09:58
Ah... Exactly why I think I should make one, to be different. :heh:
But, here's the update, after discussion, I decided to cast Lana as earlier decided (before I thot that the group needed an idiot). To compensate, I'll have Kujo troll the boys a little more. Like:
Elise: JIMUBIIN~~ TUTTURU~~
Jim: ...what are you after?
Elise: (Kuroneko Mode) I heard that's the kind of girl you're into.
Jim: Don't confuse me for that lolicon.
Nemo: I'm not a lolicon! I like women AND lolis!
And Lana is thankful the pay is good enough to put up with these goons. Of course, once Jim goes into Licenced to Chill mode, everything's serious.
SaintessHeart
2011-06-07, 10:48
*facepalms*
Kha, the very nature of the work of sniping, requiring quiet intense focus, means that naturally genki and loudmouthed people do not gravitate to this job.
Carlos Hathcock. Outside of focusing on the target, he would insult them. I read a book on sniper biography before and it isn't about character as people like to put it - it is about the ability to flow into the environment, like a musician. You could check out how he responds in the interview in Sniper : Inside the Crosshair - combined with the book it says alot about sniper myths and what kind of person he is.
EDIT: You guys fail. We have so many snipe, but they all have the same personality (almost). Here was I looking for a cute female sniper who squeaks PEW with each shot and I find none! :heh:
EDIT2: I just had an idea. I'll genderbend and tame gunblade23's Snipe. Perfect.
Actually it depends on what kind of sniper weapon we give the person. I have seen a sniper-trained NCO shouting and talking so freely, while his demolition trained deputy is so....quiet. :heh:
Carlos Hathcock. Outside of focusing on the target, he would insult them. I read a book on sniper biography before and it isn't about character as people like to put it - it is about the ability to flow into the environment, like a musician. You could check out how he responds in the interview in Sniper : Inside the Crosshair - combined with the book it says alot about sniper myths and what kind of person he is.
Actually it depends on what kind of sniper weapon we give the person. I have seen a sniper-trained NCO shouting and talking so freely, while his demolition trained deputy is so....quiet. :heh:
It's more a matter of common sense, ask yourself if your sniper is willing to give away her location to the target's homies because she felt like whistling Johnny Comes Marching Home. It's not that hard to think why sniper as a job is usually taken on by people able to keep it quiet during a mission, yes they can crack jokes, yes they can talk about the lastest Spiderman issue but when the time comes there is no room to go perky moé girl. This is why it is easier to compute Kirika Yumura and Mireille Bouquet as possibly taking on sniper job than Subaru Nakajima and Excel, godmamnit. I could nOT make Svetlana a genki moéball, because damn, she was an infant during the fucking Siege of Sarajevo, aka the closest thing to a sniper's wet dream in the last decades, she grew up in an area that had ethnic tension and was about to burst into a new conflict anytime. She had to toughen up a bit, and kept enough of girliness to not turns into a sociopath because that's the least I could do for her to avoid falling into the cold-blooded psychopathic sniper.
SaintessHeart
2011-06-07, 13:37
It's more a matter of common sense, ask yourself if your sniper is willing to give away her location to the target's homies because she felt like whistling Johnny Comes Marching Home. It's not that hard to think why sniper as a job is usually taken on by people able to keep it quiet during a mission, yes they can crack jokes, yes they can talk about the lastest Spiderman issue but when the time comes there is no room to go perky moé girl. This is why it is easier to compute Kirika Yumura and Mireille Bouquet as possibly taking on sniper job than Subaru Nakajima and Excel, godmamnit.
I think we are agreeing on the same thing : work ethic. They are quiet during operations and noisy outside of it. So what is wrong with a noisy and energetic sniper? It is the focus on the job at hand that matters, and maintaining radio and noise discipline - not the "character suitability". "Work capability" is certainly more important in this scenario because not many people can flow with the environment.
Terminator98
2011-06-07, 13:53
*Takes aim*
Neko-Chan (Whistling): "Twinkle twinkle little star..."
*BANG! BANG! BANG!*
Shot on target. Pursuing cars disabled
Neko-chan (Moe Voice): "Phew! That recoil is so annoying... Let me see if I didn't mess up my make-up while aiming..."
*Flips out a mirror*
Neko-Chan (Furious): "AH! DARN SCOPE... The paint used to color that thing wasn't dry!!!! "
*Flips out phone, dials in a number*
Adolph (Annoyed): "Hello yes? What is it? I'm somewhat-"
Neko-Chan (Mad): "ADOLPH, THE PAINT ON THE SCOPE WAS FRESH. WHAT THE HELL DOES THAT MEAN?"
Adolph (Confused): "... you just blew my ear drums. What the hell are you talking about?"
Neko-Chan (Mad): "That sniper rifle I asked you to get me yesterday... IT JUST RUINED MY BEAUTY! THE PAINT ON THE SCOPE... IT-"
Adolph (Condescending): "Sorry about the paint... dunno, might've been the freighting conditions. Anyways, I'm busy he-"
*BANG* A sniper shots whizzes by Adolph's right foot
Neko-Chan (Yandere Voice): "You still busy?"
Adolph (Sweating): "Eh.... no..."
If she comes into actual creation though... Dunno.
"Work capability" is certainly more important in this scenario because not many people can flow with the environment.
Please, do note that out of the few Snipe OCs in the thread, at least two have a background story that justifies this capability, having been hunting game with a mentor. And both of them are well socially adjusted girls who don't mind following friends in a karaoke booth.
SaintessHeart
2011-06-07, 13:58
Please, do note that out of the few Snipe OCs in the thread, at least two have a background story that justifies this capability, having been hunting game with a mentor. And both of them are well socially adjusted girls who don't mind following friends in a karaoke booth.
I know that and I accept that, and the girls are fine as they are, even if they are noisy and energetic yelling their heads off at a rock concert. So what is your point here?
Terminator98
2011-06-07, 14:05
I think that there's no point... it was just aimed at Kha's wish for snipers saying "NYA" everytime they pull the trigger... moving awkwardly and bumping into objects, tripping everytime while relocating and the such... unless it's a fail sniper. (Or he has something to redeem this.) For example, we could create an OC that equals Reki on the ricochet and aiming magic... but utterly fails at staying discrete or relocating (clumsy). So yeah, the only place you would employ that kind of sniper is in noisy environments where making noises isn't a big problem.
Wild Goose
2011-06-07, 14:19
Carlos Hathcock. Outside of focusing on the target, he would insult them. I read a book on sniper biography before and it isn't about character as people like to put it - it is about the ability to flow into the environment, like a musician. You could check out how he responds in the interview in Sniper : Inside the Crosshair - combined with the book it says alot about sniper myths and what kind of person he is.
Emphasis mine. Your mention of Hathcock only supports my premise. He challenged the enemy quietly by wearing a white feather in his boonie hat. Throughout (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Jmg9VHjlx1M)this (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tiReoU_Edo4)interview (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Jmg9VHjlx1M), he's also neither brash nor loudmouthed - just the facts, with a certain confidence and pride in his skills and legacy. And a sense of humor, which one can always appreciate.
I'll allow that he did admit that he did enjoy the hunt and his job, though note that he but not just for killing's sake.
Also, I'm curious to your sources, if only so I may read them. Mine's Marine Sniper, by Charles Henderson, and Sniper School, a Discovery Channel documentary.
I also note that you ignored the last stand of Shugart and Gordon, which was handled by both operators very quietly and calmly while facing certain death.
There are times where I wonder if you're actually serious in participating, given that you don't seem to want to respond to comments others make on your thoughts, but you'll chime in anyway on others. This road ain't one way.
Actually it depends on what kind of sniper weapon we give the person. I have seen a sniper-trained NCO shouting and talking so freely, while his demolition trained deputy is so....quiet. :heh:
To both SaintessHeart and Kha: As something which I have mentioned before and which seems to have not registered: there are always exceptions to the general rule. The mere existence of exceptions does not invalidate the general rule. While such exceptions exist, and you have apparently met one in real life, because of the nature of the work they do, there is a strong trend for snipers to be people who know how to shut the fuck up when on scope, and then relax afterwards and blow off steam.
Not shouting away hot bloodedly and in a manner befitting a blood knight, crying out for kills, and taking a delighted excitement in every shot, and thus not focusing on the task at hand. And if you put such a person behind the scope, well then you deserve whatever you're getting.
Also, all the loud yelling and crap would interfere with BRASS, which is key to shooting.
As for the weapon: it would depend on what is your engagement. Military snipers generally engage to further distances than police snipers. Police sniper rifles are usually zeroed for shorter ranges - 100 to 300 meters - and built for greater accuracy than military rifles - they also cost more, generally speaking, though Butei is apparently footing the bill so that's less of an issue.
What to use? Generally most favor the 7.62mm NATO or .308 Winchester Magnum, which are almost similar in terms of profile (IIRC, rifles chambered for the latter can fire the former, but not vice versa due to differences in chamber pressures). There's also the .300 Winchester Magnum, the somewhat more exotic .338 Lapua... 5.56mm is possible but is rarely used for sniping, instead employed in accurised assault rifles such as the designated marksman variant of the SIG SG 550.
.50BGM is rarely used by police snipers; the few cases where .50 BGM antimaterial rifles are known to be used, they are intended as a means of forcibly disabling vehicles.
If you're worried about logistics and supply, 7.62mm NATO is your best bet, since it's one of the most common rifle calibers in the world; .308 Winchester Magnum comes a close second. Regards rifle - depends on your charecter. Bolt action rifles are generally more accurate but unless they use box magazines or stripper clips, generally are a pain in the ass to reload quickly compared to semiauto rifles. On the other hand semiauto rifles can't achieve the level of accuraccy a bolt action can. On the other hand, depending on your engagement range, and your profile, that may not matter - there's a reason why snipers in urban combat in Iraq have been switching to semiauto rifles like M14 DMR/EBR/EMR or the SR-25.
Cut short? Most sniper rifles in the world for dedicated police snipers tend to be bolt action, and Remington makes a tidy sum selling it's 700P and VTR as police-oriented sniper rifles. If you're not sure, go with Remington - Big Green has a good reputation for a reason. Or H-S Precision, which makes the rifles for the FBI's HRT.
It's more a matter of common sense, ask yourself if your sniper is willing to give away her location to the target's homies because she felt like whistling Johnny Comes Marching Home. It's not that hard to think why sniper as a job is usually taken on by people able to keep it quiet during a mission, yes they can crack jokes, yes they can talk about the lastest Spiderman issue but when the time comes there is no room to go perky moé girl. This is why it is easier to compute Kirika Yumura and Mireille Bouquet as possibly taking on sniper job than Subaru Nakajima and Excel, godmamnit. I could nOT make Svetlana a genki moéball, because damn, she was an infant during the fucking Siege of Sarajevo, aka the closest thing to a sniper's wet dream in the last decades, she grew up in an area that had ethnic tension and was about to burst into a new conflict anytime. She had to toughen up a bit, and kept enough of girliness to not turns into a sociopath because that's the least I could do for her to avoid falling into the cold-blooded psychopathic sniper.
Quoted for truth.
The more I look at Hidan no Aria, the more I'm starting to think it's essentially Holmes redone in the modern day, meaning that while there's a general positive vibe and a sense of accomplishment, bad things can still happen in this world and reality still ensures. There's still good in the world, and things are not as bad as Tropa de Elite 1 & 2, but there's still clouds amidst the rainbows...
tl;dr: bad things happen to good people, but this verse has hope that things won't have downer endings.
I think we are agreeing on the same thing : work ethic. They are quiet during operations and noisy outside of it. So what is wrong with a noisy and energetic sniper? It is the focus on the job at hand that matters, and maintaining radio and noise discipline - not the "character suitability". "Work capability" is certainly more important in this scenario because not many people can flow with the environment.
The problem with Gunblade23's charecter was that he was essentially a loud blood knight who enjoyed the killing perhaps too much and was not able to shut the hell up, and was noisy during operations. And the problem with Kha's idea is that she'd be excited with every shot, being genki while on the scope, and make exclamations with each pull of the trigger.
Persons who are generally loudmouthed, genki, outgoing and gregarious by nature are not people who will be able to turn all that off and focus at the task at hand silently. That was the character suitability that I was getting at, which you seem to have not understood. I speak from observations from my workplace.
Now as with most things if enough work is put into those outgoing and gregarious people, they can be trained to a result that we end up with a more or less happy medium: focus on the scope, and blowing off steam off scope, which is how it should be. Hathcock, afterall, had a sense of humor, and Mawhinney was by accounts a cheerful outgoing guy who was friendly and humorous and completely focused when on the job.
I think that there's no point... it was just aimed at Kha's wish for snipers saying "NYA" everytime they pull the trigger... moving awkwardly and bumping into objects, tripping everytime while relocating and the such... unless it's a fail sniper. (Or he has something to redeem this.) For example, we could create an OC that equals Reki on the ricochet and aiming magic... but utterly fails at staying discrete or relocating (clumsy). So yeah, the only place you would employ that kind of sniper is in noisy environments where making noises isn't a big problem.
You've more or less summed up the point (or relative lack thereof). That said I would strongly disagree with such a character - both from a practical as well as a story standpoint. As a deployable asset, a character of the nature that you propose would be a hazard to him or herself; also, as said character is none too reliable, few Butei would want to work with such an unreliable asset.
That's why Noa Izumi is one of the best pilots in Patlabor. She may not have Ohta's gung ho or shooting skills, or Kanuka's piloting ability, but she's always reliable and that counts for so much more.
Marcus H.
2011-06-07, 20:10
Ah... Exactly why I think I should make one, to be different. :heh:
But, here's the update, after discussion, I decided to cast Lana as earlier decided (before I thot that the group needed an idiot). To compensate, I'll have Kujo troll the boys a little more. Like:
Elise: JIMUBIIN~~ TUTTURU~~
Jim: ...what are you after?
Elise: (Kuroneko Mode) I heard that's the kind of girl you're into.
Jim: Don't confuse me for that lolicon.
Nemo: I'm not a lolicon! I like women AND lolis!
And Lana is thankful the pay is good enough to put up with these goons. Of course, once Jim goes into Licenced to Chill mode, everything's serious.
Elise is gonna be a massive troll, that's for sure. :heh:
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-07, 20:37
The Story so far... Summary for quick update, not a full profile. New Side characters added.
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After fleeing a blown operation in Nigeria and being kidnapped and beaten, Arisato finds himself stuck in Tokyo he has been abandoned by all his normal intelligence contacts and is under continuous surveillance by the local law enforcements agencies with his personal assets frozen. Arisato soon learns that he has been flagged as an 'extremely dangerous person' and was blacklisted by the entire Intelligence community, even the Butei Organization considers him as 'radioactive' and refuses to talk to him. Extraordinary efforts to reach his former handler yield only a grudging admission that someone powerful wants him "on ice" in Tokyo. If he leaves there, he will "heat up fast" with every Law enforcement agency in the country, including his former allies in the Butei, would take part in the manhunt.
In addition to that, because Minato is not longer officially recognised by any agency and hence not entitled to their protection, he's considered "free game" on the open market. He has manage to attract the attention of a syndicate of Ex-Butei that have been blacklisted or fired due to severe criminal charages. He has also manage to piss off the EU after he sabotaged their operations in St Peterborough along with a large number of criminal organizations from Japan to the west. If that wasn't enough, even the Assassin Brotherhood led by his younger brother wants to find him.
(Even Aria once tried to pin some indecent public behaviour charges on him...)
In need of some cash to survive, Arisato reluctantly works as an unlicensed private investigator and problem solver for ordinary citizens to fund his personal investigation into his situation as a blacklisted Butei. Together with his best friend Saito, and two former romance interest Raimei and Ada, he unofficially formed Team [Even].
(I don't know if it makes Minato a Quadra if I give him dual USP45 and two hidden blades...)
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Main Characters: Team [EVEN]
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Name: Saito
Status: Informa
Saito is the 'Waston' to Minato, and the type of friend who is loyal and would always have your back. Unlike most "Best friend" Character, Saito is the straight man is tasked with holding Minato down to Earth. And given how tactless and insensitive Minato can be with social and romantic contexts, Saito reluctantly becomes his unofficial Relationship consultant. He presents himself as "the guy who knows a guy," and Minato frequently relies on Saito seemingly inexhaustible list of contacts; Saito has a friend in every government agency in the country.
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Name: Fuyumi Raimei
Status: Assault
Ancestor: Saint Barbara
Raimei and Minato has a complicated history; It was Minato that set her on this path of being an Assault Butei. Raimei re-enters Minato's life when he is dumped in Tokyo and she decides to help him, quickly making herself valuable to him. Aside from serving as his explosives and firearms expert, as well as private armory. she provides support to him on his investigations and, at times, assists him in missions to find out who blacklisted him.
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Name: Ada
Status: CVR
Ada and Minato met when he was in St Peterborough working on a case against the EU. When she heard he's blacklisted and stuck in Tokyo, she immediately transferred to the Tokyo Butei high to offer him her assistance, much to Raimei's dismay. She affectionately calls him 'Misha', as that was the alias he had used when he first met her.
Side Characters
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Name: Ryoushi
Status: Snipe
One of Saito's good friend and a valuable ally to Minato. Ryoushi occasionally helps the team out by providing sniper cover; But much to Saito's dismay, Minato prefers to use Ryoushi for his amazing talent as a human lie detector who's able to clear identify a person's emotions and if they're hiding something from simply observing their facial expression. Ryoushi is usually a shy boy, but he hopes to one day work up to courage to confess to the girl he likes.
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Name: Siesta
Status: SSR
Ancestor: Lady Frieda Harris
Siesta was a girl that Minato though he was saving from an evil cult, but had actually successfully kidnapped her from her family. She's a modern Magician that follows the system of Thelesma set by Aleister Crowley, and wields her magic through the Thoth Tarot Cards. Siesta also provides Minato with a place to stay while he's still stuck in Tokyo. Both of them seems to be blissfully unaware how inappropriate it is for a teenage boy and girl to be living under the same roof.
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Name: Liszt
Status: Non-Butei Student
Liszt is a metrosexual and very successful money launderer who is often used by Minato as a source of information about, and introductions to, members of the Tokyo underworld. Minato also sometimes pays Barry to use his skills at doctoring financial records to help him create cover IDs and to frame his enemies for misconduct. Liszt is fully aware of Minato's status but could not care less, as it is his business to deal with shady characters. Liszt runs his money washing business with his cousin, and is suspiciously close to her.
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Name: Takako Itsukushima
Status: Student President of Seio Girls' Academy
The rich ojou-sama character; Saito first met her on a mission with Minato months ago where the two of them were task to protect her from a kidnapping. Contrast to Saito's rather lay-back personality, She tends to have a serious personality which compliments that of a student council president. As the president of an All-Girls school, she knows that she must be very decisive in her actions and thus cannot often hesitate with her decisions, since she knows the students would have trouble following her if she didn't act as such. As it is, Takako herself has stated how she almost never has confidence in herself. She and Saito rarely see eye to eye and the two of them gets into many couple-like quarrels, but over time the two of them started to warm up to each other.
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Name: Raphael Auditore
Alias: Arisato Ryoji
Ancestor: Ezio Auditore da Firenze
Status: Minato's younger brother, Master of the Assassin's Brotherhood.
The current head of the Assassin's Brotherhood and is the equal to Minato in every way except that he's a far more dangerous fighter that wields an astounding ten weapons at once; Two SIG-Sauer P228, Two Combat Knives, Two hidden blades on his wrists, Two switch blades in his shoes, And his scarf is made of Carbon Nano fibers with steel woven serrated edges- It won't slice through Kevlar, but it would still leave nasty gashes and even take out an eye.
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Alias: Igor
Alliance: Management
Management is a professional black ops syndicate that works independently of any known government. They utilize burned spies, ex-butei assassins, mercenaries, and independent contractors within their own group. Because of Arisato Minato's reputation as a talented and creative operative, Management engineered his "burn notice" in order to put him in a vulnerable enough position to recruit him. Though implied to be a large cartel with several members, the only representative Minato had seen is 'Igor'.
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-07, 23:19
I suppose all this takes place in the future, after all of them have graduated?
I'm trying to save the Jim Bean: Brotherhood novella, which features Minato, Preston and Jim.
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-07, 23:36
I suppose all this takes place in the future, after all of them have graduated?
I'm trying to save the Jim Bean: Brotherhood novella, which features Minato, Preston and Jim.
...No? Why did you have that impression :heh:
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-07, 23:53
...No? Why did you have that impression :heh:Because his missions and consequences seem to belong to a fully-trained Butei rather than a freshman. I had to dumb down the adventures of Bean because of this.
But I'm leaning towards the notion that A and S rank missions everywhere are the same. That means even students of the right level can take them. Which then means I'm going to be tagging Minato A Certain Unfortunate Fool. :heh:
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-08, 00:07
Because his missions and consequences seem to belong to a fully-trained Butei rather than a freshman. I had to dumb down the adventures of Bean because of this.
But I'm leaning towards the notion that A and S rank missions everywhere are the same. That means even students of the right level can take them. Which then means I'm going to be tagging Minato A Certain Unfortunate Fool. :heh:
Mah~ I get the idea from Aria that country hopping isn't too farfletch. I get the impression from everybody else, that a Butei killing someone has major consequences. Usually you'll get arrested, but if they do that then the officials would have to declassified those files, if they don't want to do that- They'll just sent you a burn notice stating that you have been blacklisted.
Don't forget, he's brought up in the Assassin's Brotherhood, that means he's got a few years (they start young) under his belt working in covert intelligences.
btw, no comments on my side characters :p ?
Terminator98
2011-06-08, 00:45
Igor has an oversized nose. He also strangely reminds me of the penguin... but it's just the art I guess. (I'm gonna have nightmares about that nose...) Why did you kick siesta out of the main cast and relegate her to housewife? O.o Also... Waston... I think you meant Watson? ;)
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-08, 01:55
Igor has an oversized nose. He also strangely reminds me of the penguin... but it's just the art I guess. (I'm gonna have nightmares about that nose...)
I didn't have time to find a proper fanart; I figure this would be enough.
Why did you kick siesta out of the main cast and relegate her to housewife? O.o Also... Waston... I think you meant Watson? ;)
You know how it is with typing :heh:
I've thought long and hard about this, I think it's for the better that I don't have too many 'main characters'. In the first place I don't intend to use Ryoushi and Siesta as much, so it's pointless to label them as main characters. It's not like she won't be doing anything, there are times when you'll need a magician then she'll step in with her expertise.
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-08, 04:40
Mah~ I get the idea from Aria that country hopping isn't too farfletch.Yeah once I remembered the Egypt arc I rethought that statement. :heh:
I get the impression from everybody else, that a Butei killing someone has major consequences. Usually you'll get arrested, but if they do that then the officials would have to declassified those files, if they don't want to do that- They'll just sent you a burn notice stating that you have been blacklisted.So that's what that part of the anime meant. I was watching GG subs that time and it was a hard trying to untroll their troll. :eyebrow:
Don't forget, he's brought up in the Assassin's Brotherhood, that means he's got a few years (they start young) under his belt working in covert intelligences.:nod:
Which is why he'll find an ally in Bean. :uhoh:
btw, no comments on my side characters :p ?I need to get to a safe hiding place first!
The Story so far... Summary for quick update, not a full profile. New Side characters added.
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After fleeing a blown operation in Nigeria and being kidnapped and beaten, Arisato finds himself stuck in Tokyo he has been abandoned by all his normal intelligence contacts and is under continuous surveillance by the local law enforcements agencies with his personal assets frozen. Arisato soon learns that he has been flagged as an 'extremely dangerous person' and was blacklisted by the entire Intelligence community, even the Butei Organization considers him as 'radioactive' and refuses to talk to him. Extraordinary efforts to reach his former handler yield only a grudging admission that someone powerful wants him "on ice" in Tokyo. If he leaves there, he will "heat up fast" with every Law enforcement agency in the country, including his former allies in the Butei, would take part in the manhunt.
In addition to that, because Minato is not longer officially recognised by any agency and hence not entitled to their protection, he's considered "free game" on the open market. He has manage to attract the attention of a syndicate of Ex-Butei that have been blacklisted or fired due to severe criminal charages. He has also manage to piss off the EU after he sabotaged their operations in St Peterborough along with a large number of criminal organizations from Japan to the west. If that wasn't enough, even the Assassin Brotherhood led by his younger brother wants to find him.
(Even Aria once tried to pin some indecent public behaviour charges on him...)
In need of some cash to survive, Arisato reluctantly works as an unlicensed private investigator and problem solver for ordinary citizens to fund his personal investigation into his situation as a blacklisted Butei. Together with his best friend Saito, and two former romance interest Raimei and Ada, he unofficially formed Team [Even].
(I don't know if it makes Minato a Quadra if I give him dual USP45 and two hidden blades...)
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Chrysanthe the current class rep bugs Jim to go check up on their missing classmate, then...
...realizes that Elise's little write-up about Minato's entire case history reads like an article off wiki. :uhoh:
Just kidding. :p
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Name: Saito
Status: Informa
Saito is the 'Waston' to Minato, and the type of friend who is loyal and would always have your back. Unlike most "Best friend" Character, Saito is the straight man is tasked with holding Minato down to Earth. And given how tactless and insensitive Minato can be with social and romantic contexts, Saito reluctantly becomes his unofficial Relationship consultant. He presents himself as "the guy who knows a guy," and Minato frequently relies on Saito seemingly inexhaustible list of contacts; Saito has a friend in every government agency in the country....and more Burn Notice.
Jim: Elise?!
Elise: Ever heard of how reality can be stranger than fiction?
Jim: Yeah right, next thing you'll tell me is that we're actually characters in someone's doujin.
Nemo: I'd take the red pill any time.
Lana: Why are you reading this when he's our classmate?
Jim: I already paid for it. -_-
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Name: Fuyumi Raimei
Status: Assault
Ancestor: Saint Barbara
Raimei and Minato has a complicated history; It was Minato that set her on this path of being an Assault Butei. Raimei re-enters Minato's life when he is dumped in Tokyo and she decides to help him, quickly making herself valuable to him. Aside from serving as his explosives and firearms expert, as well as private armory. she provides support to him on his investigations and, at times, assists him in missions to find out who blacklisted him. Jim: ...I know these people, so I'm just going to skip the histories. >.>
Elise: (Mayushii mode) Jimbin, you meanie. :(
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Name: Ada
Status: CVR
Ada and Minato met when he was in St Peterborough working on a case against the EU. When she heard he's blacklisted and stuck in Tokyo, she immediately transferred to the Tokyo Butei high to offer him her assistance, much to Raimei's dismay. She affectionately calls him 'Misha', as that was the alias he had used when he first met her.Jim: Now I'm actually learning something.
Elise: Hah, made you look! ;)
Jim: :eyebrow:
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Name: Ryoushi
Status: Snipe
One of Saito's good friend and a valuable ally to Minato. Ryoushi occasionally helps the team out by providing sniper cover; But much to Saito's dismay, Minato prefers to use Ryoushi for his amazing talent as a human lie detector who's able to clear identify a person's emotions and if they're hiding something from simply observing their facial expression. Ryoushi is usually a shy boy, but he hopes to one day work up to courage to confess to the girl he likes.Jim: That explains why Ookami been on snipe duty instead.
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Name: Siesta
Status: SSR
Ancestor: Lady Frieda Harris
Siesta was a girl that Minato though he was saving from an evil cult, but had actually successfully kidnapped her from her family. She's a modern Magician that follows the system of Thelesma set by Aleister Crowley, and wields her magic through the Thoth Tarot Cards. Siesta also provides Minato with a place to stay while he's still stuck in Tokyo. Both of them seems to be blissfully unaware how inappropriate it is for a teenage boy and girl to be living under the same roof.Elise: This piece of information is thanks to Eri-chan.
Eri: :nod: You should get your fortune read by Siesta-san sometime.
Jim: That's not the point right now...
Nemo: That guy's got more luck than we do.
Jim: Don't count on it.
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Name: Liszt
Status: Non-Butei Student
Liszt is a metrosexual and very successful money launderer who is often used by Minato as a source of information about, and introductions to, members of the Tokyo underworld. Minato also sometimes pays Barry to use his skills at doctoring financial records to help him create cover IDs and to frame his enemies for misconduct. Liszt is fully aware of Minato's status but could not care less, as it is his business to deal with shady characters. Liszt runs his money washing business with his cousin, and is suspiciously close to her.Jim: Think we can get in contact with him?
Elise: You do it. This broker trades in favors.
Nemo: I wonder what favors did he ever ask of you? :naughty:
Elise: D-Don't give me that look, pervert.
Nemo: I'm not a pervert! I'm a gentleman pervert!
I'll need something to get on his side. But what can we provide? Maybe MI:6 has some answers...
http://img405.imageshack.us/img405/1020/takakokowai.th.jpg (http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/405/takakokowai.jpg/)
Name: Takako Itsukushima
Status: Student President of Seio Girls' Academy
The rich ojou-sama character; Saito first met her on a mission with Minato months ago where the two of them were task to protect her from a kidnapping. Contrast to Saito's rather lay-back personality, She tends to have a serious personality which compliments that of a student council president. As the president of an All-Girls school, she knows that she must be very decisive in her actions and thus cannot often hesitate with her decisions, since she knows the students would have trouble following her if she didn't act as such. As it is, Takako herself has stated how she almost never has confidence in herself. She and Saito rarely see eye to eye and the two of them gets into many couple-like quarrels, but over time the two of them started to warm up to each other.Jim: ...oh good.
Elise: Huh?
Jim: Not her.
Elise: Ex-fling?
Jim: I'll just say it was mentally scarring and leave it at that...
Elise: Heh... So there IS a girl the great Jim Bean is afraid of.
Jim: It's not like that... Uh never mind.
She seems like an accessory to the whole scheme of things. But knowing the Brotherhood, she might be in as much danger as the rest. But unlike the rest, she is not under any Butei-level security. I'll have to factor this in any plan.
...or I could just get her into some trouble first then try white knighting... Tempting...
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Name: Raphael Auditore
Alias: Arisato Ryoji
Ancestor: Ezio Auditore da Firenze
Status: Minato's younger brother, Master of the Assassin's Brotherhood.
The current head of the Assassin's Brotherhood and is the equal to Minato in every way except that he's a far more dangerous fighter that wields an astounding ten weapons at once; Two SIG-Sauer P228, Two Combat Knives, Two hidden blades on his wrists, Two switch blades in his shoes, And his scarf is made of Carbon Nano fibers with steel woven serrated edges- It won't slice through Kevlar, but it would still leave nasty gashes and even take out an eye. Definitely dangerous, especially after that meeting. 'Takes a thief to catch a thief' huh... At least Preston and I agree, it was better that we found Minato before anyone else did.
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Alias: Igor
Alliance: ManagementNow where have I seen him before...
Nemo: Mmm... I can see the gears turning.
Elise: So?
Jim: Eri, think you can let Siesta and Minato know that we got his message, and we'll work from our end?
Eri: *salute* Yes, cousin!
Jim: Time for some groundwork... OPERATION URD, STARTO!!
Nemo: Delusion fail.
Jim: I love that show so much.
Elise covers her face with her palm.
:uhoh:
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-08, 04:56
So that's what that part of the anime meant. I was watching GG subs that time and it was a hard trying to untroll their troll. :eyebrow:
What? No, that was from as well.
Chrysanthe the current class rep bugs Jim to go check up on their missing classmate, then...
...realizes that Elise's little write-up about Minato's entire case history reads like an article off wiki. :uhoh:
Just kidding. :p
...and more Burn Notice.
Jim: Elise?!
Elise: Ever heard of how reality can be stranger than fiction?
Jim: Yeah right, next thing you'll tell me is that we're actually characters in someone's doujin.
Nemo: I'd take the red pill any time.
Lana: Why are you reading this when he's our classmate?
Jim: I already paid for it. -_-
Jim: ...I know these people, so I'm just going to skip the histories. >.>
Elise: (Mayushii mode) Jimbin, you meanie. :(
Jim: Now I'm actually learning something.
Elise: Hah, made you look! ;)
Jim: :eyebrow:
I haven't really changed their profile at all, this is just from completion sake. Raimei and Ada's history and personality I have it all set in their full profile somewhere in this thread. The only thing I add is that Raimei likes Hamsters ALOT and Ada likes to dress girls in her fancy clothes.
Saito I need to straighten out what I really want from his personality, so I guess he's just the Comic-relief best friend (minus tsundere), but unlike most Comic-relief best friend, he's the sensible one.
Jim: That explains why Ookami been on snipe duty instead.
It does :uhoh: ?
[B]Elise: This piece of information is thanks to Eri-chan.
Eri: :nod: You should get your fortune read by Siesta-san sometime.
Jim: That's not the point right now...
Nemo: That guy's got more luck than we do.
Jim: Don't count on it.
Minato knows he's lucky...That someone is willing to give him a place to stay for free.
That's all, lol :heh:
Jim: Think we can get in contact with him?
Elise: You do it. This broker trades in favors.
Nemo: I wonder what favors did he ever ask of you? :naughty:
Elise: D-Don't give me that look, pervert.
Nemo: I'm not a pervert! I'm a gentleman pervert!
I'll need something to get on his side. But what can we provide? Maybe MI:6 has some answers...
I'm not exactly sure if that's how Money Washing works :heh:
Jim: ...oh good.
Elise: Huh?
Jim: Not her.
Elise: Ex-fling?
Jim: I'll just say it was mentally scarring and leave it at that...
Elise: Heh... So there IS a girl the great Jim Bean is afraid of.
Jim: It's not like that... Uh never mind.
Just to be sure you're not getting the wrong idea... This isn't the trap >.>
She seems like an accessory to the whole scheme of things. But knowing the Brotherhood, she might be in as much danger as the rest. But unlike the rest, she is not under any Butei-level security. I'll have to factor this in any plan.
...or I could just get her into some trouble first then try white knighting... Tempting...
I've thrown in some vague relationship with Saito; I've always complaining how best friend characters never get any girls, well I've thrown in a big fish now- It doesn't get any grander than "Tsundere Rich ojou-sama Student president of an ALL-GIRLS school"
Marcus H.
2011-06-08, 05:02
Èlise's profile is now up on Google Docs!
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1MX2YX1qgBoeUc5dGly1xLV3Ct16d5WN_uZmH5wVvtfI/edit?hl=en_US&authkey=CK_fhIcP
Terminator98
2011-06-08, 06:05
Along with Elise comes my newest OC (who gets released before the overhauled ones... XD)
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Alexandra: This school is stuffed with weirdos...
Yui: Are you saying that you aren't one, miss Van Helsing?
Kyousuke: For sure nee-san... since when have you been so arrogant?
Alexandra: Ah well... Sorry if I sounded this way... but I just had the feeling that this place was way out of the norms.
Asuka: Alex-san... stop complaining! The supernatural stuff is awesome! Do you know how much I'd pay to befriend a dragon?
Kyousuke: A dragon? My, my... I think that this is a bit too far fetched. Anyways... let me present you someone I just met and she's... *reads info sheet carefuly* ... nevermind...
Asuka: DON'T TELL ME SHE'S A DRAGON!?
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Character Sheet for: Hisako "Lucy" Amaterasu (https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Kh8QuBschTbQWjebaCf0n1La9BFTfYF4mAL9Lkb9bsU/edit?hl=en_GB&authkey=CJjq_fYB)
Comments welcomed as always.
@Anyone with skills in Japanese... I NEED HELP ON LUCY'S SPELLS... check if there are any consistencies and point em out to me plz..
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-08, 06:08
What? No, that was from [Burn Notice] as well.Oh I was pretty sure I read about it in the episode thread and saw it implied in the episode when Butei Law 9 first came up.
I haven't really changed their profile at all, this is just from completion sake. Raimei and Ada's history and personality I have it all set in their full profile somewhere in this thread. The only thing I add is that Raimei likes Hamsters ALOT and Ada likes to dress girls in her fancy clothes.Jim: I'm so glad 'Nagi' is in another class. :heh:
Saito I need to straighten out what I really want from his personality, so I guess he's just the Comic-relief best friend (minus tsundere), but unlike most Comic-relief best friend, he's the sensible one. He sounds fine as he is right now.
It does :uhoh: ?Assault with Snipe elective. Dual Taser mitts, SIG Sauer P24, and SG-550-1. In my head, she's technically part of EVEN, so when Ryoushi's on the ground she has the option to hang back. But not very far, her Nemo-made taser mitts are still her most reliable weapons.
Minato knows he's lucky...That someone is willing to give him a place to stay for free.
That's all, lol :heh:Jim, Nemo, Saito don Inquisition hats.
Unforgivable...
I'm not exactly sure if that's how Money Washing works :heh:Elise: Look at it this way, does any of us have the amount of money to trade at his level?
Jim looks at Nemo.
Nemo: My money is needed to feed my 2D wives! And I have a lot of them!
Jim: Look at yourself before you say something like that.
Just to be sure you're not getting the wrong idea... This isn't the trap >.>Of course not, or the conversation would be a lot more different I can assure you. <.<
I've thrown in some vague relationship with Saito; I've always complaining how best friend characters never get any girls, well I've thrown in a big fish now- It doesn't get any grander than "Tsundere Rich ojou-sama Student president of an ALL-GIRLS school"Jim: True, then you factor in that when you get any where near her, the entire school revolts.
Elise: Is that what happened with you? :)
Jim: ...>.>
Èlise's profile is now up on Google Docs!
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1MX2YX1qgBoeUc5dGly1xLV3Ct16d5WN_uZmH5wVvtfI/edit?hl=en_US&authkey=CK_fhIcPNemo: You know? I think I've just figured out what you are missing. *eyetwinkle*
Elise: ...s-stop staring like that...
Nemo: Yes. Yeees. You're missing... *dramatic point* VICTORIAN FASHION!
Elise: W-What?! Don't involve me in your goth lolita fetishes!!
Nemo: Oh so you do know about goth lolita fetish. :D
Jim: Its a piiinch.
Ada: That's a great idea! Come this way I have just the thing... *curtain being drawn*
Elise: Wait! Stop! I didn't say I wanted to-- Don't take my clothes-- Ah! Don't!
Jim: >.>
Saito: <.<
Minato: :confused:
Nemo: WIN!
:uhoh:
SaintessHeart
2011-06-08, 07:00
Assault with Snipe elective. Dual Taser mitts, SIG Sauer P24, and SG-550-1. In my head, she's technically part of EVEN, so when Ryoushi's on the ground she has the option to hang back. But not very far, her Nemo-made taser mitts are still her most reliable weapons.
Swap the SG550 with a bigger gun? I think with a 5.56 round it wouldn't have an effective range of more than 500m. HK417 using a 7.62 round with a 16" barrel should fit her size.
Then again, she is doing snipe elective, so her weapon doesn't have to be that fat. :heh:
Icy.Tear
2011-06-08, 07:17
Do you know what 「々」 denotes. It is used to repeat the word before, as in ｢日々」 [Hibi]. Therefore, a more appropriate pronunciation would be ｢紫々イロカネ」 [Shishiirokane].
[Shinn] ｢真」 only has 1 'n'. For ｢真国の雨」 You didn't put ｢天」 although you had it under the romaji.
As far as I know, 「灼」 is pronounced [Shaku] when used in or as a noun, 「灼く」 is a verb variation of 「焼く」. In any case, the [i] seems irrelevant as you omitted the 「い」, especially since 「灼」 is not 形容詞.
To me, [Ryuu Ken] is a more natural pronunciation than [Ryuu Tsurugi].
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I feel as if several of these OCs would be the most powerful beings in the HnA universe, to the point where they would encounter little to no opposition. The possession of Irokane is, alone, extremely, extremely rare.
The main character, Lucy, could kill the entire main cast of characters by herself.
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-08, 07:46
Èlise's profile is now up on Google Docs!
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1MX2YX1qgBoeUc5dGly1xLV3Ct16d5WN_uZmH5wVvtfI/edit?hl=en_US&authkey=CK_fhIcP
"Urusai! Baka! Shinde! I-I don't care about love! L-Love is R-R-Rubbish! I don't have anyone I l-l-l-like! Hontoni hontoni honto!"
Oh I was pretty sure I read about it in the episode thread and saw it implied in the episode when Butei Law 9 first came up.
Well when I asked around, I never got a straighter answer than 'Butei can't kill' and that the punishment is more severe than for normal people. I added in the classified information part which would lead to being blacklist as you can't charge someone without declassifying those documents.
Elise: Look at it this way, does any of us have the amount of money to trade at his level?
Jim looks at Nemo.
Nemo: My money is needed to feed my 2D wives! And I have a lot of them!
Jim: Look at yourself before you say something like that.
So.... How is this 2D wives money of his dirty? Is he working part time for the Drug Cartels? Freelance Mercenary? Taking corporate bribes :eyespin: ?
Jim: True, then you factor in that when you get any where near her, the entire school revolts.
Elise: Is that what happened with you? :)
Jim: ...>.>
Mah~ It's not really the entire school... >.>
I feel as if several of these OCs would be the most powerful beings in the HnA universe, to the point where they would encounter little to no opposition. The possession of Irokane is, alone, extremely, extremely rare.
The main character, Lucy, could kill the entire main cast of characters by herself.
Thankfully I've avoided superpowers all save for one character :D
Terminator98
2011-06-08, 08:31
Do you know what 「々」 denotes. It is used to repeat the word before, as in ｢日々」 [Hibi]. Therefore, a more appropriate pronunciation would be ｢紫々イロカネ」 [Shishiirokane].
[Shinn] ｢真」 only has 1 'n'. For ｢真国の雨」 You didn't put ｢天」 although you had it under the romaji.
As far as I know, 「灼」 is pronounced [Shaku] when used in or as a noun, 「灼く」 is a verb variation of 「焼く」. In any case, the [i] seems irrelevant as you omitted the 「い」, especially since 「灼」 is not 形容詞.
To me, [Ryuu Ken] is a more natural pronunciation than [Ryuu Tsurugi].
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I feel as if several of these OCs would be the most powerful beings in the HnA universe, to the point where they would encounter little to no opposition. The possession of Irokane is, alone, extremely, extremely rare.
The main character, Lucy, could kill the entire main cast of characters by herself.
Thanks HEEEEAAAAAPPPPPSSSS for the corrections... gonna rectify everything that failed.
Also, as for the possession of irokane, team baskerville is full of it from what I understood.
Kinji's butterfly knife is possibly one? O.o
Aria has one in her body? O.o
Rikko has one? O.o
Shirayuki's Katana's one? O.o
Jeanne D'Arc's probably one? O.o
That's a lot of small Irokanes. That's why I consdered giving my OCs something to make them a bit powerful.
And yes, Kyousuke is around Dracula's levels, while as you said, Lucy breaks the power meter. There are a few things that one must take in account though that limits them.
- As pointed out earlier, Kyousuke WILL NOT use his Vampire powers as he wishes because he will be forced to vampirize someone in the aftermath. That someone is also very important to him. (Unless everyone's about to die... and still, he could prefer dieing in normal mode than fighting in his OP modes)
- Lucy must first of all... not spam her dragon powers, or else, the entire world will know of her existence, and she will be pretty screwed (science teams will fight to obtain her, various governments will want their hands on her, etc..)
Then, we have to take into account of Lucy herself, she HATES to fight, and will only fight back if she is protecting someone. Besides, I was more imagining her to be on equal grounds with SHirayuki's ninja abilities or Patra's god breaking powers... these two seem to be quite powerful. Aria herself is nothing to scoff at.
SaintessHeart
2011-06-08, 08:31
So.... How is this 2D wives money of his dirty? Is he working part time for the Drug Cartels? Freelance Mercenary? Taking corporate bribes :eyespin: ?
Doing PT jobs for Reisen (i.e acting as an agent between a H-game publisher and Reisen to get stock, Reisen gives him a cut of the profits :D)
Terminator98
2011-06-08, 08:51
@Icytears:
So actually... how should I "Empty Burning Destruction"? (In japanese that is)
Icy.Tear
2011-06-08, 08:59
It is not confirmed that Jeanne, Shirayuki or Kinji have Irokane. While I say 'rare', I mean extremely powerful. For a list of abilities that merely possessing awakened Hihiirokane provides, consult the Hidan no Aria wiki.
「空ろの燃える破滅」
Made some small updates to Tomomi (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=3638950&postcount=356).
Terminator98
2011-06-08, 09:16
It is not confirmed that Jeanne, Shirayuki or Kinji have Irokane. While I say 'rare', I mean extremely powerful. For a list of abilities that merely possessing Hihiirokane provides, consult the Hidan no Aria wiki.
「空ろの燃える破滅」
I already checked the Wiki, and I've seen that these powers are extremely powerful.
We've also seen how Shirayuki is a one man army (with fire magics), and how Aria is the equivalent of an assault battalion, which is why I thought of lumping a Dragon in there.
Oh well, different balance ideas I'd guess. At least rest assured... even though the idea of a dragon seems overly OP in my fic... she'll most of the time be the harmless damsel in distress.
But the claim that Lucy could wipe the floor with the entire cast is a bit off I think... She SHOULD be able to match either Aria or Shirayuki one on one, but there's no way she's beating Holmes by herself... or berserker Kinji. :o
SaintessHeart
2011-06-08, 09:17
I already checked the Wiki, and I've seen that these powers are extremely powerful.
We've also seen how Shirayuki is a one man army (with fire magics), and how Aria is the equivalent of an assault battalion, which is why I thought of lumping a Dragon in there.
Oh well, different balance ideas I'd guess. At least rest assured... even though the idea of a dragon seems overly OP in my fic... she'll most of the time be the harmless damsel in distress.
But the claim that Lucy could wipe the floor with the entire cast is a bit off I think... She SHOULD be able to match either Aria or Shirayuki one on one, but there's no way she's beating Holmes by herself... or berserker Kinji. :o
Maybe you could lump a mecha dragon in there. :D
LoweGear
2011-06-08, 09:22
This was recently brought to my attention, and...
http://img405.imageshack.us/img405/1020/takakokowai.th.jpg (http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/405/takakokowai.jpg/)
Name: Takako Itsukushima
Status: Student President of Seio Girls' Academy
The rich ojou-sama character; Saito first met her on a mission with Minato months ago where the two of them were task to protect her from a kidnapping. Contrast to Saito's rather lay-back personality, She tends to have a serious personality which compliments that of a student council president. As the president of an All-Girls school, she knows that she must be very decisive in her actions and thus cannot often hesitate with her decisions, since she knows the students would have trouble following her if she didn't act as such. As it is, Takako herself has stated how she almost never has confidence in herself. She and Saito rarely see eye to eye and the two of them gets into many couple-like quarrels, but over time the two of them started to warm up to each other.
C2F.... you did not just straight-port Takako into Aria, creating an Otoboku x Aria Crossover the likes of which has scrambled my braincells so hard that they've turned into a muticolored mush resembling a cross between Jambalaya and Salsa :eyespin::eyespin::eyespin:
But remember, Takako only has eyes for her Mizuho-oneesama :uhoh::uhoh::uhoh:
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-08, 09:24
It's been god knows how many years already :eyespin::eyespin::eyespin: !! Nobody cares about Otome wa boku anymore!
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-08, 09:34
Actually I did... Which was what got me going, "oh good."
But I later read closer, and so ALL GIRLS and thought Maria+Holic was in there?
Then came your reply, which made me thank Keima I didn't commit myself into a trap. :uhoh:
Terminator98
2011-06-08, 09:34
Maybe you could lump a mecha dragon in there.
Actually... MECHA GODZILLA???!!!!
But he's not really a dragon... so yeah...
C2F.... you did not just straight-port Takako into Aria, creating an Otoboku x Aria Crossover the likes of which has scrambled my braincells so hard that they've turned into a muticolored mush resembling a cross between Jambalaya and Salsa
Now... THAT explains why that girl looked so incredibly familiar.
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-08, 09:43
Actually I did... Which was what got me going, "oh good."
But I later read closer, and so ALL GIRLS and thought Maria+Holic was in there?
Then came your reply, which made me thank Keima I didn't commit myself into a trap. :uhoh:
Ahh, I see where you're going with this; both Saito and Minato did not crossdress, in fact they wanted to stand out in an All-Girls school; there are two types of security- the ones you see, and the ones that hides in the crowds. By making themselves obvious targets, the kidnappers would not notice Ada and Raimei closing in on them.
Now... THAT explains why that girl looked so incredibly familiar.
See? Nobody cares about Otoboku anymore!
LoweGear
2011-06-08, 09:46
See? Nobody cares about Otoboku anymore!
Well, I do, and hence the statement "nobody" has been nullified :p:p
Unless you're suggesting I'm a divine, aethereal non-corporeal entity, in which case "nobody" would apply to me :p:uhoh:
SaintessHeart
2011-06-08, 10:21
Actually... MECHA GODZILLA???!!!!
But he's not really a dragon... so yeah...
A combat drone in a shape of the dragon, with a weapons bay in its stomach, hellfire missiles on its legs, a gatling gun in its mouth, and when landing on the ground, its tail straightens over its back to become a 15 pounder? :heh:
Terminator98
2011-06-08, 10:25
A combat drone in a shape of the dragon, with a weapons bay in its stomach, hellfire missiles on its legs, a gatling gun in its mouth, and when landing on the ground, its tail straightens over its back to become a 15 pounder? :heh:
There's been no mecha popping up in Ariaverse as far as I can say... But for sure...
This would make a decent antagonist... Let's say... JSDF had something go awry in their research lab?
Then we have MechaGodzilla vs Godzilla reiteration (with a much cuter dragon though).... YES!!!!
SaintessHeart
2011-06-08, 10:28
There's been no mecha popping up in Ariaverse as far as I can say... But for sure...
This would make a decent antagonist... Let's say... JSDF had something go awry in their research lab?
Then we have MechaGodzilla vs Godzilla reiteration (with a much cuter dragon though).... YES!!!!
Ariaverse is already so detached from reality as it is, skinny little girls wielding pistols with perfect ease and without breaking their arms to the recoil, so what is with a dragon combat drone? :heh:
Ariaverse is already so detached from reality as it is, skinny little girls wielding pistols with perfect ease and without breaking their arms to the recoil, so what is with a dragon combat drone? :heh:
But the tech level of Aria is nowhere like Index's; no power armors and the likes. There may be that rare metal but it is something like fuckking rare.
SaintessHeart
2011-06-08, 10:36
But the tech level of Aria is nowhere like Index's; no power armors and the likes. There may be that rare metal but it is something like fuckking rare.
There are ICBMs that transport human beings. :heh:
Terminator98
2011-06-08, 10:43
There are ICBMs that transport human beings.
That's because the guy IS so awesome that he can do that.
But in truth... everyone turns out awesome in Ariaverse...
SaintessHeart
2011-06-08, 10:44
That's because the guy IS so awesome that he can do that.
But in truth... everyone turns out awesome in Ariaverse...
So is he a bad guy or good guy? We could start building the character from there.....
Updated Revvy's (https://docs.google.com/document/d/1FyO3Uh9O0GFqWB3S6suS22j0XRJWhPLuU4SWigneyWM/edit?hl=en_US&authkey=CO781pQO) Profile with her initial "Song Magic" list.
Also in the works is an artifact and the final Vanguard.
SaintessHeart
2011-06-08, 12:20
Updated Revvy's (https://docs.google.com/document/d/1FyO3Uh9O0GFqWB3S6suS22j0XRJWhPLuU4SWigneyWM/edit?hl=en_US&authkey=CO781pQO) Profile with her initial "Song Magic" list.
Also in the works is an artifact and the final Vanguard.
Duet! Do a duet with Reyva! :D
Duet! Do a duet with Reyva! :D
*stabs Saintess with the question (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=3640305&postcount=379) back in page 19*
SaintessHeart
2011-06-08, 13:31
*stabs Saintess with the question (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=3640305&postcount=379) back in page 19*
I missed that post. Sorry. :D
Reyva : Was naa paul yor.
Revvy : Eh?
Reyva : Na! Speak Japanese! I am horrible at that language!
Wild Goose
2011-06-08, 13:59
Ariaverse is already so detached from reality as it is, skinny little girls wielding pistols with perfect ease and without breaking their arms to the recoil, so what is with a dragon combat drone? :heh:
Not as detached as one might think. Unusual ability users aside, the world of Aria is very much like our world - and we don't have mecha.
Choutei were already pushing it - mecha would be a bit too much, IMO. Let's not forget that mecha aren't really that practical in the real world - even Patlabor and Gasaraki, arguably the most realistic mecha anime - showed that actual employment would be a freaking pain in the ass, which is why we don't have mecha in real life. While a bipedal war machine looks cool and is cool, in the end it's not practical or useful.
Also, regards wielding guns and breaking their hands, I refer back to Magpul Dynamics Art of the Dynamic Handgun; one of the things taught in that course is that the way you hold your weapon, your grip and how you position your arms, can be used to mitigate the effects of recoil. It's also not inconceivable that Aria's weapons would have been modified to reduce recoil, albeit this is my speculation.
Returning to the subject of mecha: suitability. Just as one should not use RPGs or antitank weapons when room clearing, nor should one attempt to convert every single shotgun in sight to lever action when there are damn good reasons pump action is dominant, nor should one fix bayonets when attempting to apprehend a suspect alive, nor should someone on a scope be all moe and lose track of the job at hand...
Now, if we consider mecha on the scale of Ghost in the Shell - the autonomous thinktanks, the Tachikoma, the next-gen military prototype from episode 2 of 1st Gig (which became the new service tank by 2nd Gig, BTW) - and then scale down from there, drastically. Note that even with all the cool toys GITS is set 20+ years after Aria - so at most we should have the prototype exoskeletons DARPA has in R&D, and perhaps a modification of whatever Riko used to control the Segway for semi-autonomous land vehicles, including and up to tanks.
Because if one wants to get serious, there's nothing a Butei student has that can take on an MBT - until Coach and D-Boy break out their gear...
tl:dr - you don't need mecha, current military hardware is awesome enough in the right hands and easier to get since there's a fuckton of ex-Soviet gear which can be acquired from various sources. Hell, a guy was able to build a functioning AH-1 Cobra (sans gun) from spares acquired legally from US Army surplus sales, so it shouldn't be too hard to get a fully functional vehicle from Russian or other client state/third world nation, particularly if enough palms are greased. Hell, given that EU apparently has a powerful piece of military hardware itself, one could make an argument for them being able to acquire such things without much difficulty - particularly if the right palms are greased.
Bah, what's the use. Whatever I say will be ignored, as usual.
There are ICBMs that transport human beings. :heh:
*raised eyebrow* I'd have to see that in the context of the show itself and what they use, but frankly it's not inconceivable. In fact, the concept itself dates to Gagarin. All you need is to replace the MIRV with a reentry capsule and ensure that it's large enough to hold your person. And voila, you've turned your ICBM from a weapon of war into a space transport. Note that ICBM research benefited greatly from the Space Race between the US and the USSR - at the end of the day, everything is militarily significant and has military applications, even can openers.*
With apologies to Colonel (Ret.) Tom Kratman, from whom I stole and paraphrased this line, from his book The Lotus Eaters.
I missed that post. Sorry. :D
Reyva : Was naa paul yor.
Revvy : Eh?
Reyva : Na! Speak Japanese! I am horrible at that language!
- apparently you seem to have forgotten the second line of EXEC_SPHILIA
*utter silence as the questioning is stopped*
Amy: greaaaaaaaaat... another one. We're taking you as well...
*cue in "you're gonna get taken home" music*
SaintessHeart
2011-06-08, 15:31
- apparently you seem to have forgotten the second line of EXEC_SPHILIA
*utter silence as the questioning is stopped*
Amy: greaaaaaaaaat... another one. We're taking you as well...
*cue in "you're gonna get taken home" music*
- I can't remember every single hymn right? Is it this one? (http://youtu.be/4oGdjaLmLqw)
Maybe I should compose a song for the two characters. :heh:
Terminator98
2011-06-08, 16:02
So is he a bad guy or good guy? We could start building the character from there.....
We all know who is the guy that transcends time and flies around on ICBMs...
The Mecha Dragon will be perhaps an antagonist or a side story to show off Lucy's utter pwnage powers...
Also... I'm still lost concerning Revyy...
So now, two OCs posted so far...
Yamato Kyousuke (https://docs.google.com/document/d/1pc8UCSJi5eI_CjXfBLsXLkgoPv6VYXf5TZ2DvEwlhxI/edit?hl=en_GB&authkey=CKH_jEc)
Hisako "Lucy" Amaterasu (https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Kh8QuBschTbQWjebaCf0n1La9BFTfYF4mAL9Lkb9bsU/edit?authkey=CJjq_fYB)
Upcomming next:
Yamato V.H. Alexandra (Overhaul + New Smexy OC pic... :D)
P.S: Goose... stop thinking that we ignore you... I like reading your down to earth stuff... stops me from getting over manly by listening to the MANLINESS that is Endoh.
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-08, 18:31
Ahh, I see where you're going with this; both Saito and Minato did not crossdress, in fact they wanted to stand out in an All-Girls school; there are two types of security- the ones you see, and the ones that hides in the crowds. By making themselves obvious targets, the kidnappers would not notice Ada and Raimei closing in on them.Chaos... Mind-sync much? Because right from the start, I was thinking of traps, except I was recalling the (obligatory) crack story (and semi-botched mission) where Jim was transformed into Jane Bean to infiltrate an all-girls school (because I will do that for every male protagonist I make)... :eyespin:
Now what was so mentally scarring? Perhaps back then, James was mistaken for the kidnapper. :uhoh:
See? Nobody cares about Otoboku anymore!Yes, me and Lowe are the 2-in-1 Nobody. :uhoh:
SaintessHeart
2011-06-08, 18:32
Yes, me and Lowe are the 2-in-1 Nobody. :uhoh:
That thing is ancient. As ancient as Clannad. :heh:
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-08, 18:34
Truth be told, I got in on Otoboku later than everyone, but last year a trap named Nyan bugged me about it so I watched it... Yeah traps get me going, both IRL and in anime.
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-08, 20:07
Chaos... Mind-sync much? Because right from the start, I was thinking of traps, except I was recalling the (obligatory) crack story (and semi-botched mission) where Jim was transformed into Jane Bean to infiltrate an all-girls school (because I will do that for every male protagonist I make)... :eyespin:
Now what was so mentally scarring? Perhaps back then, James was mistaken for the kidnapper. :uhoh:
Yes well, considering that everybody's crossdressing these days, I think it's fair to say that it's more unique to want to stand out in an All-Girls school. WHich is pure torture if you think about it- The worst form of psychological torture for a teenage guy is to be surrounded by packs of girls giggling and whispering and pointing behind your back, and you have absolutely no idea what they're talking about...
...Yeah, pure hell...
(For all intend and purposes, Ichika tried to 'fit in')
Yes, me and Lowe are the 2-in-1 Nobody. :uhoh:
Well, I do, and hence the statement "nobody" has been nullified :p:p
Unless you're suggesting I'm a divine, aethereal non-corporeal entity, in which case "nobody" would apply to me :p:uhoh:
Bah! If I never brought it up you two would never ever hear about otoboku forever again :p
That thing is ancient. As ancient as Clannad. :heh:
Nay, people still talk about Clannad :p
Truth be told, I got in on Otoboku later than everyone, but last year a trap named Nyan bugged me about it so I watched it... Yeah traps get me going, both IRL and in anime.
...What the Fractale? Nyan was a trap? How did you mistaken Nyan for a girl :eyespin:? I mean if it's Keroko I would understand but Nyan :eyespin: ?
But the tech level of Aria is nowhere like Index's; no power armors and the likes. There may be that rare metal but it is something like fuckking rare.
Well, not yet anyway. But even then I suppose they're not going to be that powerful...
Wild Goose
2011-06-08, 21:44
P.S: Goose... stop thinking that we ignore you... I like reading your down to earth stuff... stops me from getting over manly by listening to the MANLINESS that is Endoh.
I was actually referring to SaintessHeart and Kha. Though after 4 years, the times when Kha actually listens to me do exist, albeit rarely happening.
@C2F: The difference between Funyan and keroko is that Funyan's been completely obvious about the trapness, while keroko kinda sorta became the mask and likes the subtle trolling. (Or somethng. I can't find the right word.)
Also, in regards Dragons, there is one actual dragon existing now which WOULD be a pain in the ass for the butei to deal with:
Puff the Magic Dragon. (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=73SciCMf9Rw)
In fact, given the fact that there are still civillian versions of this particular airframe it wouldn't be beyond the realm of possibility for EU to again get a C-47 and outfit it to AC-47 standards. Alternatively, they could just spring for the the AC-130 model; there was one unit reported lost in the Gulf War, but what if it wasn't actually lost but was acquired by EU...
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-08, 23:17
Come on Goose, you know I do listen, just whether I reply, or act on it, is something else. :p
I suppose a F117 modified to be a boarding craft (I saw it in a movie starring Steven Seagal) could be useful in taking it down, but isn't this sort of job you know for the military? A Spooky in the air will no doubt make the host nation scramble fighters in response.
Unless its true that the EU is in control of whole nations, since I've always felt that it was the JSDF fighters that fired upon Aria's jetliner.
Wild Goose
2011-06-08, 23:39
Firstly, an F-117 modified to be a boarding craft is ludicrous.
Secondly, given what we've seen, if a Spooky flew into a private airfield and had all the documents stating that it was a basic vanilla C-47, there's no way on radar to tell the difference between it and a C-47, except by visual inspection.
There will still be a delay between when it starts firing and when the JASDF can scramble to intercept, and that delay can be extended with proper greasing of palms and coercion.
That said, a helicopter gunship is still much easier to pull off compared to a Spooky or a Spectre, since there are a fair number of helicopters with dual civillian/military use - twin Huey, Dolphin, etc - that you could fly in a military bird made up to look like a normal civvie charter, and then quickly outfit with the required weapons.
Edit: Now, regards insertion craft, it was theorized by John Ringo that one could load Navy SEALs into a B-2's bomb rack and have it spit them out as a stealthy insertion platform. He also admitted that he was told this would not really work in real life.
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-08, 23:56
@C2F: The difference between Funyan and keroko is that Funyan's been completely obvious about the trapness, while keroko kinda sorta became the mask and likes the subtle trolling. (Or somethng. I can't find the right word.)
I remember the day I told Keroko that I tend to forget that he's not a girl; I've never seen him so happy before...
Oh wait, so it's Funyan and not Nya~n ?!
What is this off topic confusion like the old days :eyespin::twitch::eyespin: !?!
Unless its true that the EU is in control of whole nations, since I've always felt that it was the JSDF fighters that fired upon Aria's jetliner.
Nay, it was mentioned that they were hit by a Surface-to-Air missile from sea... Which would technically make it a Ship-to-Air missile I think.
Wild Goose
2011-06-09, 00:20
I remember the day I told Keroko that I tend to forget that he's not a girl; I've never seen him so happy before...
Oh wait, so it's Funyan and not Nya~n ?!
What is this off topic confusion like the old days :eyespin::twitch::eyespin: !?!
Sorry, I was thinking of his OCT handle :p Same person.
Nay, it was mentioned that they were hit by a Surface-to-Air missile from sea... Which would technically make it a Ship-to-Air missile I think.
Any missile fired from either ground or sea towards an air target is a Surface to Air Missile, aka SAM, regardless of launch platform. The surface can either be solid ground, or the liquid sea.
Can you elaborate further as to the information? Was it from a military vessel? Was it from a boat with a couple of guys packing Stingers or other IR guided man-portable SAMs?
Terminator98
2011-06-09, 00:25
I'd highly doubt that it was a vessel or a sea installation as the JSDF would've been able to easily pinpoint the area from where the missiles were fired (especially as we're talking of a missile fired ON A PLANE RIGHT ABOVE TOKYO... although why they just didn't blow up the plane in two was a good question *nvm... I think I know why*).
Unless EU itself has infiltrated the JSDF... which would be... well, would make more sense. :P
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-09, 00:33
Any missile fired from either ground or sea towards an air target is a Surface to Air Missile, aka SAM, regardless of launch platform. The surface can either be solid ground, or the liquid sea.
Can you elaborate further as to the information? Was it from a military vessel? Was it from a boat with a couple of guys packing Stingers or other IR guided man-portable SAMs?
I'd highly doubt that it was a vessel or a sea installation as the JSDF would've been able to easily pinpoint the area from where the missiles were fired (especially as we're talking of a missile fired ON A PLANE RIGHT ABOVE TOKYO... although why they just didn't blow up the plane in two was a good question *nvm... I think I know why*).
Unless EU itself has infiltrated the JSDF... which would be... well, would make more sense. :P
It's actually kinda of a spoiler :heh: Kinji and the others didn't know what it was until end of Vol 4.
The missiles were fired from a certain colossal nuclear submarine that had gone missing in 1979...
Terminator98
2011-06-09, 00:39
ah, so it was the submarine...
Well, I was already spoiled about the fact that EU had it.
Wild Goose
2011-06-09, 01:08
I'd highly doubt that it was a vessel or a sea installation as the JSDF would've been able to easily pinpoint the area from where the missiles were fired (especially as we're talking of a missile fired ON A PLANE RIGHT ABOVE TOKYO... although why they just didn't blow up the plane in two was a good question *nvm... I think I know why*).
Unless EU itself has infiltrated the JSDF... which would be... well, would make more sense. :P
No search and targeting radars detected means that the launch platform fired infrared-guided missiles, a fact borne out by the fact that the two missile that hit went for the engines.
Again, I was thinking of a couple of guys on a small boat with Stingers - fire, toss the Stingers overboard, that's the end of the story.
I've heard that the Kilo-class SSKs that the russians are exporting have facilities for storing SAMs so that the sub can defend itself against ASW helos.
As for infiltrating the JSDF, I wouldn't be surprised if that's the case.
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-09, 06:45
Character Sheet for: Hisako "Lucy" Amaterasu (https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Kh8QuBschTbQWjebaCf0n1La9BFTfYF4mAL9Lkb9bsU/edit?hl=en_GB&authkey=CJjq_fYB)
Comments welcomed as always.As yes, the leading lady of Jim Bean: Menage a Trois. :uhoh:
Swap the SG550 with a bigger gun? I think with a 5.56 round it wouldn't have an effective range of more than 500m. HK417 using a 7.62 round with a 16" barrel should fit her size.
Then again, she is doing snipe elective, so her weapon doesn't have to be that fat. :heh:Yeah, Ookami uses the SG550 as more of a extended range assault engagement option rather than a full sniping device. Besides... she still sucks at aiming. Gertrude is still practicing with her.
"Urusai! Baka! Shinde! I-I don't care about love! L-Love is R-R-Rubbish! I don't have anyone I l-l-l-like! Hontoni hontoni honto!"Nemo: ABUSE ME MORE!
So.... How is this 2D wives money of his dirty? Is he working part time for the Drug Cartels? Freelance Mercenary? Taking corporate bribes :eyespin: ?That's the thing. He's Captain Nemo. Where the hell does his money come from? Most people say its black money, but he insists its all from smart investing...
Mah~ It's not really the entire school... >.>
Yes well, considering that everybody's crossdressing these days, I think it's fair to say that it's more unique to want to stand out in an All-Girls school. WHich is pure torture if you think about it- The worst form of psychological torture for a teenage guy is to be surrounded by packs of girls giggling and whispering and pointing behind your back, and you have absolutely no idea what they're talking about...
...Yeah, pure hell...
(For all intend and purposes, Ichika tried to 'fit in'):heh:
It all depends on what you need to do. Bean... needed to be discreet. >.>
Bah! If I never brought it up you two would never ever hear about otoboku forever again :pThat's true. I have problems with using them as OCs.
...What the Fractale? Nyan was a trap? How did you mistaken Nyan for a girl :eyespin:? I mean if it's Keroko I would understand but Nyan :eyespin: ?
I remember the day I told Keroko that I tend to forget that he's not a girl; I've never seen him so happy before...
Oh wait, so it's Funyan and not Nya~n ?!
What is this off topic confusion like the old days :eyespin::twitch::eyespin: !?!You're just confused yourself. :p
Nay, it was mentioned that they were hit by a Surface-to-Air missile from sea... Which would technically make it a Ship-to-Air missile I think.Ah forgot to factor that.
The missiles were fired from a certain colossal nuclear submarine that had gone missing in 1979...Now here's the next funny thing. I can't locate a single reference to a Super Aqua-class Soviet boomer on the internet. No such reporting name exists...
Did he pull this one out of his ass, or does the Vostok exist in some war novel I haven't read?
Interesting that subs will be featured in Aria V4... By my timeline, V4 is when the Nautilus IV is launched.
Marcus H.
2011-06-09, 06:56
ABUSE ME MORE!
Èlise: A bit of sadism is in the blood.
Seeing you huffing and puffing in agony, your out-of-shape thighs straining as you plod up and down the stairs for me... is one of my great pleasures!
Terminator98
2011-06-09, 07:09
@Meister:
The only possible submarine that Sherlock might've stolen is THIS ONE:
K-27
K-27 was laid down on 15 June 1958 and launched on 1 April 1962. The submarine was commissioned on 30 October 1963 after full-scale builders sea trials and official tests.
The first patrol mission of the experimental submarine to Central Atlantic was performed between 21 April-12 June 1964 (52 days). Captain of K-27, captain 1st rank I.I. Gulyaev was awarded with the Hero of the Soviet Union for mission success and record of submarine continuous underwater stay. The second patrol mission to the Mediterranean Sea took place between 29 June-30 August 1965 (60 days), K-27 detected and performed training attack with a nuclear torpedo against US Randolph aircraft carrier during NATO naval maneuvers off Sardinia. US carrier force could only detect K-27 when she obtained range to the training target after the "torpedo attack" but Soviet captain P.F. Leonov skillfully disengaged. K-27 passed 12,425 miles (including 12,278 miles undersea) during the first cruise and 15,000 miles during the second one. K-27 entered service with the Red Banner Northern Fleet (given to 17th submarine division, based in Gremikha) on 7 September 1965 as the test submarine.
An emergency in the port-side reactor took place on 24 May 1968 in the Barents Sea during trials of submerged K-27 at full speed (AR-1 automatic control rod raised up spontaneously and the reactor power decreased from 83% to 7% during 60-90 sec). It should be noted that the responsible officers informed the command before trials that port-side reactor was not tested yet after small failure took place on 13 October 1967 but their warnings were not taking into consideration. The emergency was accompanied by gamma activity excursion in the reactor compartment (up to 150 R/hour and higher) and spread of radioactive gas along the other compartments. All crewmembers (124 men) were irradiated, and the main reason according to some crewmembers' memoirs was the fact that submarine captain, Captain 1st Rank P.F. Leonov believed in reliability of a new type of the reactor too much, so he didn't order to resurface immediately, didn't inform crewmembers from other compartments about radiation hazard on board and allowed to have a usual dinner even. Radiation alarm was transmitted only after requests of a chemical officer and a doctor. K-27 resurfaced and returned from training area to home base using the starboard reactor. The submarine was placed at pier in Severomorsk and a depot ship continuously piped steam to submarine to avoid cooling of heat-transfer metal in the reactor. The most heavily irradiated ten men (holders from the reactor compartment) were transported by aircraft to Leningrad 1st naval hospital next day but four of them (V. Voevoda, V. Gritsenko, V. Kulikov and A. Petrov) died within a month, electrician I. Ponomarenko died on watch in the emergency reactor compartment on 29 May. More than 30 sailors participated in accident elimination died between 1968-2003 because of over exposure to radiation and the Soviet government held back the truth about the tragic consequences of that reactor emergency for many years.
K-27 tied up in Gremikha bay since 20 June 1968 with cooling reactors and different experimental works were made aboard till 1973 when rebuilding or replacement of the port-side reactor was considered as too expensive and inappropriate procedure. The submarine was decommissioned on 1 February 1979 and her reactor compartment was filled with special solidifying mixture of furfurol and bitumen in summer 1981 (the work was performed by Severodvinsk shipyard No. 893 "Zvezdochka"). K-27 was towed to a special training area in the Kara Sea and scuttled there on 6 September 1982 in the point 72°31'N 55°30'E (north-east coast of Novaya Zemlya, Stepovoy Bay) at a depth 33 m only (in contravention of an IAEA requirement which asked to scuttle the submarine somewhere at a depth not less than 3,000-4,000 m).
We could always imagine that it was never scuttled... and instead EU got its hands on it.
Also, funnily enough, Vostok is the name of a Russian watch brand that names its watches after Soviet Nuclear Submarines.
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-09, 08:05
Èlise: A bit of sadism is in the blood.Jim: It's not just in the blood, its in neon lights emblazoned over that tasty chest of yours.
Don't you just love a bit of office politik. :D
@Meister:
The only possible submarine that Sherlock might've stolen is THIS ONE:
K-27
K-27 was laid down on 15 June 1958 and launched on 1 April 1962. The submarine was commissioned on 30 October 1963 after full-scale builders sea trials and official tests.
The first patrol mission of the experimental submarine to Central Atlantic was performed between 21 April-12 June 1964 (52 days). Captain of K-27, captain 1st rank I.I. Gulyaev was awarded with the Hero of the Soviet Union for mission success and record of submarine continuous underwater stay. The second patrol mission to the Mediterranean Sea took place between 29 June-30 August 1965 (60 days), K-27 detected and performed training attack with a nuclear torpedo against US Randolph aircraft carrier during NATO naval maneuvers off Sardinia. US carrier force could only detect K-27 when she obtained range to the training target after the "torpedo attack" but Soviet captain P.F. Leonov skillfully disengaged. K-27 passed 12,425 miles (including 12,278 miles undersea) during the first cruise and 15,000 miles during the second one. K-27 entered service with the Red Banner Northern Fleet (given to 17th submarine division, based in Gremikha) on 7 September 1965 as the test submarine.
An emergency in the port-side reactor took place on 24 May 1968 in the Barents Sea during trials of submerged K-27 at full speed (AR-1 automatic control rod raised up spontaneously and the reactor power decreased from 83% to 7% during 60-90 sec). It should be noted that the responsible officers informed the command before trials that port-side reactor was not tested yet after small failure took place on 13 October 1967 but their warnings were not taking into consideration. The emergency was accompanied by gamma activity excursion in the reactor compartment (up to 150 R/hour and higher) and spread of radioactive gas along the other compartments. All crewmembers (124 men) were irradiated, and the main reason according to some crewmembers' memoirs was the fact that submarine captain, Captain 1st Rank P.F. Leonov believed in reliability of a new type of the reactor too much, so he didn't order to resurface immediately, didn't inform crewmembers from other compartments about radiation hazard on board and allowed to have a usual dinner even. Radiation alarm was transmitted only after requests of a chemical officer and a doctor. K-27 resurfaced and returned from training area to home base using the starboard reactor. The submarine was placed at pier in Severomorsk and a depot ship continuously piped steam to submarine to avoid cooling of heat-transfer metal in the reactor. The most heavily irradiated ten men (holders from the reactor compartment) were transported by aircraft to Leningrad 1st naval hospital next day but four of them (V. Voevoda, V. Gritsenko, V. Kulikov and A. Petrov) died within a month, electrician I. Ponomarenko died on watch in the emergency reactor compartment on 29 May. More than 30 sailors participated in accident elimination died between 1968-2003 because of over exposure to radiation and the Soviet government held back the truth about the tragic consequences of that reactor emergency for many years.
K-27 tied up in Gremikha bay since 20 June 1968 with cooling reactors and different experimental works were made aboard till 1973 when rebuilding or replacement of the port-side reactor was considered as too expensive and inappropriate procedure. The submarine was decommissioned on 1 February 1979 and her reactor compartment was filled with special solidifying mixture of furfurol and bitumen in summer 1981 (the work was performed by Severodvinsk shipyard No. 893 "Zvezdochka"). K-27 was towed to a special training area in the Kara Sea and scuttled there on 6 September 1982 in the point 72°31'N 55°30'E (north-east coast of Novaya Zemlya, Stepovoy Bay) at a depth 33 m only (in contravention of an IAEA requirement which asked to scuttle the submarine somewhere at a depth not less than 3,000-4,000 m).
We could always imagine that it was never scuttled... and instead EU got its hands on it.
Also, funnily enough, Vostok is the name of a Russian watch brand that names its watches after Soviet Nuclear Submarines.Sherlock? You guys are making it sound like Professor Moriarty and Holmes are the same person. :heh:
K-27 was the only one consistent to surface in all my searches too. Been looking for specs and schematics to look at and visualize. But from the looks of things, the 1st Nautilus (Verne) outmatches the K-27, except that it doesn't have torpedo tubes.
Vostok. I know that too, used that as a name of an OC for Valkyria Chronicles; I used watchmakers as a theme. Trying to piece together the historical significance was even harder. I for a moment thought that it might even be the Red October. :heh:
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-09, 08:08
They had me fooled too; I assumed the Vostok was an actual submarine that the Author researched up- Until I've tried to wiki it myself and came up with only the name of a watchmaker and a Soviet shipyard used to build cold war subs.
Sherlock? You guys are making it sound like Professor Moriarty and Holmes are the same person. :heh:
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you could, you know, start reading the light novels.
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-09, 08:46
you could, you know, start reading the light novels.Okay now this is giving me the creeps. Because I had imagined Holmes must be some kind of Dr Who before reading... :uhoh:
Read first, and then understand why you are getting the flak.
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-09, 09:15
The more I've read, the more tamer my conjurations seem though. :heh:
SaintessHeart
2011-06-09, 10:14
Yeah, Ookami uses the SG550 as more of a extended range assault engagement option rather than a full sniping device. Besides... she still sucks at aiming. Gertrude is still practicing with her.
Then she needs a bullpup rifle, like a Kel-Tec RFB or a Tavor if she is doing the sharpshooter role. Bullpups are easier to aim, but bulkier and harder to reload.
And as I am importing my character profiles to googledocs, I realized I did not give them birthdays so I check astrological signs to see what they possibly could be, and it also helps to adjust the description of their personalities and give them flaws I have not thought of.
Terminator98
2011-06-09, 10:57
BIRTHDAYS ARE RESERVED FOR PLOT!
Like when the harem wants to fight over the main guy... or the main guy and the main girl get to have a romantic time...
That's what birthdays are for. Unless you're char is also a super magic being with a screwed destiny where he'll get killed or on the contrary, elevated to a higher plane of power on his "xx"th birthday whatever...
YES!
FlameSparkZ
2011-06-09, 13:21
So...I've lurked around for a while, posting every now and then. But it's time I posted an OC (first of a handful of underdogs) :heh:
Though, due to unforseen circumstances, my powers (read: scanning my drawings) have been sealed.
So, I have no choice but to resort to my hidden abilities ;)
Enough glorification, here's the first...
Name: Shichijou Koyomi (七条 小詠)
VA: Miru (http://www.animenewsnetwork.com/encyclopedia/people.php?id=5900)
Age: 15
Gender: Female
Date of Birth: January 12th
Blood type: O
Height: 151cm
Sizes: 79/53/78
Class: 1-D
Butei Rank: D
Ancestor: Kouga clan (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/K%C5%8Dga-ry%C5%AB) (branch family)
Department: Assault (Lezzad elective)
Bloodline Ability: None
Weapon: assortment of ninja equipment and SIG P229 (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/SIG_P226#P228_.28M11.29)
Appearance:
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v33/zetar0n1n/Spritework/hnakoyomi.png
Personality:
Cowardly, reserved and extremly shy, quickly hiding when someone tries to talk to her.
Character Quotes:
"....! *hides*"
Background:
From a branch family of the famous Kouga ninja clan, she's a "failure" among them for being unable to carry out missions.
Koyomi was rigorously trained in the clan's many arts, but her potential is more than halved due to her mellow personality.
So in order to improve, she was sent to Butei high and forced to apply to Assault.
Ability:
Due to her strict education and training, Koyomi developed a particular "state".
It was applied to her as a form of hypnosis in order to unleash her true potential.
But to activate it certain conditions are required...conditions she herself isn't aware of.
One of those conditions is to remove the ribbon around her forehead, which holds up her hair.
The hair then covers her eyes and awakens Koyomi's other side.
When triggered, her eyes and personality turn into that of a ruthless fightning machine wielding weapons with deadly accuracy.
Though, when in this state she can't distinguish friend from foe, so anything that is a threat will be neutralized.
Fortunately, she can still control herself enough to not kill her targets.
As a word pun, this state was named Kamikakushi, read as "hidden by hair" and not "hidden by gods".
Trivia:
Her "tareme (http://anidb.net/perl-bin/animedb.pl?show=lexicon&mode=character&vtype=ctag&relid=2076)" (droopy eyes) shift to "tsurime (http://anidb.net/perl-bin/animedb.pl?show=lexicon&mode=character&vtype=ctag&relid=2075)" (usually concealed by her long fringe) when in "kamikakushi" state.
Comments:
She was inspired on Shinobu, a one-chapter character in a manga that looked absolutely adorable X3
So I took her appearance and quirks as base, added a few more to the formula from other characters like her.
That's it for now, I'll see if I can post the others soon.
About 3 or 4 of them are male, and I'll probably be using pictures for their portraits...sprite manipulation takes quite some time to complete :heh:
Terminator98
2011-06-09, 13:36
So...I've lurked around for a while, posting every now and then. But it's time I posted an OC (first of a handful of underdogs) :heh:
Though, due to unforseen circumstances, my powers (read: scanning my drawings) have been sealed.
So, I have no choice but to resort to my hidden abilities ;)
Enough glorification, here's the first...
Name: Shichijou Koyomi (七条 小詠)
VA: Miru (http://www.animenewsnetwork.com/encyclopedia/people.php?id=5900)
Age: 15
Gender: Female
Date of Birth: January 12th
Blood type: O
Height: 151cm
Sizes: 79/53/78
Class: 1-D
Butei Rank: D
Ancestor: Kouga clan (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/K%C5%8Dga-ry%C5%AB) (branch family)
Department: Assault (Lezzad elective)
Bloodline Ability: None
Weapon: assortment of ninja equipment and SIG P229 (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/SIG_P226#P228_.28M11.29)
Appearance:
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v33/zetar0n1n/Spritework/hnakoyomi.png
Personality:
Cowardly, reserved and extremly shy, quickly hiding when someone tries to talk to her.
Character Quotes:
"....! *hides*"
Background:
From a branch family of the famous Kouga ninja clan, she's a "failure" among them for being unable to carry out missions.
Koyomi was rigorously trained in the clan's many arts, but her potential is more than halved due to her mellow personality.
So in order to improve, she was sent to Butei high and forced to apply to Assault.
Ability:
Due to her strict education and training, Koyomi developed a particular "state".
It was applied to her as a form of hypnosis in order to unleash her true potential.
But to activate it certain conditions are required...conditions she herself isn't aware of.
One of those conditions is to remove the ribbon around her forehead, which holds up her hair.
The hair then covers her eyes and awakens Koyomi's other side.
When triggered, her eyes and personality turn into that of a ruthless fightning machine wielding weapons with deadly accuracy.
Though, when in this state she can't distinguish friend from foe, so anything that is a threat will be neutralized.
Fortunately, she can still control herself enough to not kill her targets.
As a word pun, this state was named Kamikakushi, read as "hidden by hair" and not "hidden by gods".
Trivia:
Her "tareme (http://anidb.net/perl-bin/animedb.pl?show=lexicon&mode=character&vtype=ctag&relid=2076)" (droopy eyes) shift to "tsurime (http://anidb.net/perl-bin/animedb.pl?show=lexicon&mode=character&vtype=ctag&relid=2075)" (usually concealed by her long fringe) when in "kamikakushi" state.
Comments:
She was inspired on Shinobu, a one-chapter character in a manga that looked absolutely adorable X3
So I took her appearance and quirks as base, added a few more to the formula from other characters like her.
That's it for now, I'll see if I can post the others soon.
About 3 or 4 of them are male, and I'll probably be using pictures for their portraits...sprite manipulation takes quite some time to complete :heh:
I have but one word.
ALLELUJAH/HALLELUJAH!!!! (that's two? Not sure...)
But yes... might have a use for her...
Though I think that every Butei needs a gun at least on her... You should get one for your ninja, even though it might not be of much use (or it might just be of better use than damn throwing stars... Ninjas of nowdays use swords AND guns)
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OK, NEW OC PROFILE REMADE ALONGSIDE WITH A MOE PIC!
Yamato V.H. Alexandra (Repier/Inquesta) (https://docs.google.com/document/d/1x7RvgiIROTc-KeQWpJ-Yvzms9saKZQPsBHnb_FEqKe0/edit?hl=en_GB&authkey=CJv_qY0N)
That's added to my two other OCs:
Yamato Kyousuke (Assault) (https://docs.google.com/document/d/1pc8UCSJi5eI_CjXfBLsXLkgoPv6VYXf5TZ2DvEwlhxI/edit?hl=en_GB&authkey=CKH_jEc)
Hisako "Lucy" Amaterasu (SSR/CVR) (https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Kh8QuBschTbQWjebaCf0n1La9BFTfYF4mAL9Lkb9bsU/edit?authkey=CJjq_fYB)
Next to come:
Miyamoto Yui (Connect)
And yes, I got so dragged into shopping that I made an entire wallpaper to keep me inspired while I gaze at my computer for the writing and all...
http://i.imgur.com/jtcuo.jpg
MeisterBabylon
2011-06-09, 18:49
And as I am importing my character profiles to googledocs, I realized I did not give them birthdays so I check astrological signs to see what they possibly could be, and it also helps to adjust the description of their personalities and give them flaws I have not thought of.Enough developer hell for me; I go by character setup. And with so many public characters I can technically 'run solo' then recruit the rest from everyone.
Then she needs a bullpup rifle, like a Kel-Tec RFB or a Tavor if she is doing the sharpshooter role. Bullpups are easier to aim, but bulkier and harder to reload.Styr AUG?
So...I've lurked around for a while, posting every now and then. But it's time I posted an OC (first of a handful of underdogs) :heh:
Though, due to unforseen circumstances, my powers (read: scanning my drawings) have been sealed.
So, I have no choice but to resort to my hidden abilities ;)
Enough glorification, here's the first...
Name: Shichijou Koyomi (七条 小詠)
VA: Miru (http://www.animenewsnetwork.com/encyclopedia/people.php?id=5900)
Age: 15
Gender: Female
Date of Birth: January 12th
Blood type: O
Height: 151cm
Sizes: 79/53/78
Class: 1-D
Butei Rank: D
Ancestor: Kouga clan (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/K%C5%8Dga-ry%C5%AB) (branch family)
Department: Assault (Lezzad elective)
Bloodline Ability: None
Weapon: assortment of ninja equipment and SIG P229 (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/SIG_P226#P228_.28M11.29)
Appearance:
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v33/zetar0n1n/Spritework/hnakoyomi.png
Personality:
Cowardly, reserved and extremly shy, quickly hiding when someone tries to talk to her.
Character Quotes:
"....! *hides*"
Background:
From a branch family of the famous Kouga ninja clan, she's a "failure" among them for being unable to carry out missions.
Koyomi was rigorously trained in the clan's many arts, but her potential is more than halved due to her mellow personality.
So in order to improve, she was sent to Butei high and forced to apply to Assault.
Ability:
Due to her strict education and training, Koyomi developed a particular "state".
It was applied to her as a form of hypnosis in order to unleash her true potential.
But to activate it certain conditions are required...conditions she herself isn't aware of.
One of those conditions is to remove the ribbon around her forehead, which holds up her hair.
The hair then covers her eyes and awakens Koyomi's other side.
When triggered, her eyes and personality turn into that of a ruthless fightning machine wielding weapons with deadly accuracy.
Though, when in this state she can't distinguish friend from foe, so anything that is a threat will be neutralized.
Fortunately, she can still control herself enough to not kill her targets.
As a word pun, this state was named Kamikakushi, read as "hidden by hair" and not "hidden by gods".
Trivia:
Her "tareme (http://anidb.net/perl-bin/animedb.pl?show=lexicon&mode=character&vtype=ctag&relid=2076)" (droopy eyes) shift to "tsurime (http://anidb.net/perl-bin/animedb.pl?show=lexicon&mode=character&vtype=ctag&relid=2075)" (usually concealed by her long fringe) when in "kamikakushi" state.
Comments:
She was inspired on Shinobu, a one-chapter character in a manga that looked absolutely adorable X3
So I took her appearance and quirks as base, added a few more to the formula from other characters like her.
That's it for now, I'll see if I can post the others soon.
About 3 or 4 of them are male, and I'll probably be using pictures for their portraits...sprite manipulation takes quite some time to complete :heh:Ah, Yanko has a friend to keep her company in the shadows (when they're both terrified of a roach) :uhoh:
Manami: Isn't that the big monstrous creature that digs itself underground, regenerates quickly and spits acid?
Jim: ...is that a roach from outer space? :heh:
Chaos2Frozen
2011-06-09, 20:48
:heh:
It all depends on what you need to do. Bean... needed to be discreet. >.>
Arisato: "You might as well come clean; Remember the Russian wet work team that got sold out? Well that's the kind of secret that stays a secret because if it got out, people get sent to Siberia; Your secret will get out after a pillow fight sleepover."
Now here's the next funny thing. I can't locate a single reference to a Super Aqua-class Soviet boomer on the internet. No such reporting name exists...
Did he pull this one out of his ass, or does the Vostok exist in some war novel I haven't read?
It's not impossible; reading up to volume 6, the Author refers to a ton of American movies, everything from John Wayne classics, to 'Pretty Woman' :twitch:
Are the Japanese that familiar with American movies :eyespin: ?
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