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Welcome to MGLN FanFiction Discussion thread.
This thread is meant for MGLN fanfiction and its discussion. Fanfiction works can be either posted in this thread or in the Fan Creations Forum (http://forums.animesuki.com/forumdisplay.php?f=14) and linked to in this thread. You may also link to Fanfiction works posted on other sites and discuss it here.
General rules of our forum (http://forums.animesuki.com/faq.php?faq=rules) still apply:
No sexually explicit material. Yes, this goes for text format as well.
Be polite to your fellow forum members
Have fun, but post intelligently
The nature of this thread means there are likely to be people that have complaints about your work. Please note that everyone is entitled to their own opinion. Practice mutual respect and debate the issue(s) without resorting to personal attacks. There is no credibility in insults, only trouble.
Please note that FanFics are written by people in their free time with no personal gain for the writers, therefore the authors owe you nothing. You are not in the position to demand anything, and if your only complaint and reason for posting is a featured pairing you dislike for personal reasons, please don't bother to let us know about it. Constructive criticism is welcomed, self-catering bashing is not. Authors should feel free to write what they desire without feeling pressured by the community. Excessive posts of such nature will be considered harassment and treated accordingly.
On a final note: Please understand that people have their own reasons and time constrains they can dedicate to reading stories posted here. Don't go complaining that your work is not getting as much attention as you would like it to; better yourselves and win their attention. (Any posts regarding the issue will be deleted)
Most importantly: have fun :)
Hello and welcome to the Fanfiction thread! Everyone's stories are welcome here, so do not hesitate to share! This post will be edited constantly to try and keep track of the many, many fanfics posted here. Below are the Author's names and the stories of Nanoha that they have written. If you would like your name and story to be added, please contact me via PM.
When people post a link to fanfiction.net or some other website that is a place for your story, I will add them to this list. If you see one that I missed, please let me know. Be advised that because people post little snippets and teasers constantly on threads such as this, only links will be added on this post.
-Please PM me if there is a mistake in your profile-
This post is only for an archive or stories, please feel free to post your stories normally here on the thread.
For the new members here, I have put together a small guide that may help you get started. You can find many of your questions answered by going here (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1620101&postcount=5257).
Ilya has also gathered up many of the terms and names for pairings that you might have questions about. If you ever run across a term you don't understand, chances are you can find it here (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1623877&postcount=5613).
TheShinySword has kindly gathered up all of the “shorts” that are posted here. A “short” is a story that was made for fun and generally only last for one post instead of becoming a story.
The Shorts Archive (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1627390&postcount=5875)
The Crack Archive (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1627393&postcount=5876)
The Shorts Archive 2 (”http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1758485&postcount=7627”)
Aaron’s Original Character profile: http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1089560&postcount=6178
Title: Mahou Shoujo Lyrical Nanoha: GenerationS
Genre: Action, Drama, Romance, Original Character
Main couple: Hayate X OC
Summary: It has been a year after the Jail Scaglietti incident. Everybody is already in their separate ways. Here, we follow the continuing story of Hayate and her Knights, as they become involved in a conflict that spans three generations… And in the process, a figure from Hayate’s past returns, and their destinies become intertwined…
Rating: PG-13 (rating may get higher if the story turns out to be too violent)
Links: Chapter 1a (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1340772&postcount=130), Chapter 1b (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1340776&postcount=131)
TitleIt's all Coming Back to Me Now (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1667288&postcount=6583)
Genre: Romance
Summary:
Rating: T
Fanfiction.net profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1493965/AshLikeSnow
That Day (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4099527/1/That_Day)
Genre: Romance/Drama
Summary: A drama and romance probably fic detailing the aftermath of Nanoha's injury, from Fate's POV. First fic evar so reviews are welcome and encouraged :3
Rating: K
Swings (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4128040/1/Swings)
Genre: Romance/Drama
Summary: Both have feelings which don't seem to reach, but after a confession, can they look forward to brighter futures? One-shot.
Rating: K
OC Profile (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1615943&postcount=323)
Marksman Tales (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1617830&postcount=5025)
Genre: Drama/Action, OC
Summary: During the StrikerS events, Vic and his fellow mages are being put through hard and easy times at TSAB.
Rating: T
Title Detective!Nanoha
Genre: Mystery/Comedy
Summary: Detective!Nanoha takes on cases that noone else can solve.
Rating: T
Links: Chapter 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1624134&postcount=5645),
Fanfiction.net profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/746291/DezoPenguin
Midnight of the Heart (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4548349/1/)
Genre: Angst/Romance
Pairing: Yuuno/Nanoha/Fate
Summary: When Fate returns home following three years of deep-space missions, she is forced to confront emotions and relationships she'd thought she'd tried to cut herself off from. Much angst, some Yuunoha, some NanoFate, and Vivio as an allegory?
Rating: T
Mending (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4567115/1/)
Genre: Romance
Pairing: Nanoha/Fate
Summary: Fate has something to confess, something that can't be mended, and something that can...
Rating: K
The Road Onward (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4580614/1/)
Genre: Adventure/Friendship
Summary: Ten-year-old Vivio is given an opportunity to choose a harder path for the future, but one which may lead her to achieving her dreams.
Rating: K
Divided Heart (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4589295/1/)
Genre: Angst/Romance
Pairing: Yuuno/Nanoha/Fate
Summary: Sequel to "Midnight of the Heart." Nanoha confronts the cost her inability to choose has exacted on Yuuno and Fate, and is faced with another choice when they present their solution.
Rating: T
Snowflakes (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4595806/1/)
Genre: Romance
Pairing: Nanoha/Fate
Summary: A winter snowfall while on assignment calls happy memories to Fate's mind. High fluff content, so bring your toothbrush.
Rating: K
Shell Game (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4610048/1/)
Genre: Adventure/Sci-Fi
Summary: Vivio is excited to take on her first field mission, but soon finds that the dangers of real life require her to test the limits of her own abilities or face the consequences.
Rating: K
Fanfiction.net profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/246069/Eagle8819
Resplendence of Ebony (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3804230/1/Resplendence_of_Ebony)
Genre: Drama/Angst
Summary: And there was silence. Cold burgundy pierced into furious blue. AU, dark fiction. FateNanoha. [Sequel to White Devil and Ode To Darkness]
Rating: M
Ignis Fatuus (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3967522/1/Ignis_Fatuus)
Genre: Drama/Romance
Main couple: Fate, Nanoha
Summary: If things were not what they seem to be. An illusion. A misleading truth. Is there even a truth? AU fiction. FateNanoha.
Rating:T
Impasse (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3885788/1/Impasse)
Genre: Drama/Romance
Main couple: Eventual FateNanoha...maybe
Summary: It was an accidental occurrence. On that day, two paths begun to gravitate towards each other, as if pulled by some kind of magnetic force, one a negative pulse, the other positive. AU, high school fiction. Eventual FateNanoha...maybe?
Rating:T
Stigma (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3843520/1/Stigma)
Genre: Angst/Romance
Main couple: FateNanoha
Summary: Because it was her own magic that she had called forth. Her very own hands that had slain. Fate Testarossa Harlaown killed for the first time when she was sixteen. Post MGLN A's. FateNanoha.
Rating: T
The Blue Sky (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3824602/1/The_Blue_Sky)
Genre: Drama
Main couple:
Summary: Takamachi Nanoha was someone who belonged to the sky. Post StrikerS. Nanoha centric. Hints of FateNanoha? No, not really..
Rating:T
Endless Time (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3783696/1/Endless_Time)
Genre: Drama/Romance
Main couple: Fate Nanoha
Summary: So when did things change, exactly? When did they start to look at each other differently? Short introspective fiction. FateNanoha. Updated 24.9.07. Betaing complete.
Rating:T
Ode To Darkness (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3745429/1/Ode_To_Darkness)
Genre: Drama/Romance
Main couple: FateNanoha
Summary: Before she might have wanted to cry. Despair. Lash out in rage. Now, she only wanted to laugh. AU oneshot. Dark story. FateNanoha.
Rating: T
White Devil (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3684052/1/White_Devil)
Genre: Drama/Hurt/Comfort
Main couple: Fate Nanoha
Summary: The pain came back tenfold, as if electricity flowed through her every vein: crackling, sharp, and burning. Blood splattered to the floor, overlapping dried, dark patches of black liquid. FateNanoha.
Rating:T
Feathers (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3596493/1/Feathers)
Genre: Drama/Hurt/Comfort
Main couple: Fate Nanoha
Summary: There was despair in Limietta's tone, and Fate knew this wasn't a hoax or a bad joke gone wrong in twenty ways. Deep FateNanoha friendship. Spoiler heavy.
Rating:T
Incognizant (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4102599/1/Incognizant)
Genre: Drama/Romance
Main couple: Fate Nanoha
Summary: You confuse me. You always confuse me. You make me feel so terribly lost.
Rating:T
Fanfiction.net Profile:http://www.fanfiction.net/u/132264/Evangelion_Xgouki
And She Smiles (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3831061/1/And_She_Smiles)
Genre: Romance/Drama
Main Couple: Fate Nanoha
Summary: After a day of work, a series of photos stir up the memories of one Enforcer Fate.
Rating: T
My Master (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3838210/1/My_Master)
Genre: Romance/Drama
Main Couple: Fate Nanoha
Summary: The reflections on one Takamachi Nanoha by a close, and dear friend.
Rating: T
Author's Comments: Sequel to And She Smiles
A Magical Christmas (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3961980/1/A_Magical_Christmas)
Genre: General
Main Couple:
Summary: Christmas is nearing and Nanoha wants her daughter Vivio to have a very special first Christmas.
Rating: T
TitleVatican Knights
Genre: Horror/ Action/ Gore
Summary: The story who reveals the bloody and dark origin of Vivio. The Vatican Hunter Vivio Valentine and her friends must follow a bloody path to stop the demon knowed as "The White Devil"
Rating: T
Links:
Chapter 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1502682&postcount=3027), Chapter 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1505340&postcount=3066), Chapter 3 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1507197&postcount=3092), Chapter 4 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1509026&postcount=3122), Chapter 5 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1514630&postcount=3223), Chapter 6 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1515485&postcount=3238), Chapter 7 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1518596&postcount=3309), Chapter 8 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1520831&postcount=3337), Chapter 9 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1521923&postcount=3347), Chapter 10 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1523330&postcount=3368)
Chapter 11 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1525881&postcount=3410) Chapter 12 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1528119&postcount=3432) Chapter 13 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1529724&postcount=3452) Chapter 14 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1530198&postcount=3456) Chapter 15 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1532081&postcount=3466) Chapter 16 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1533814&postcount=3479) Chapter 17 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1534791&postcount=3490) Chapter 18 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1536236&postcount=3528) Chapter 19 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1538636&postcount=3548) Chapter 20 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1542855&postcount=3589)
Chapter 21 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1544814&postcount=3603) Chapter 22 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1546676&postcount=3626) Chapter 23 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1550216&postcount=3659) Chapter 24 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1551515&postcount=3671) Chapter 25 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1553445&postcount=3686) Chapter 26 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1554505&postcount=3690) Chapter 27 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1561708&postcount=3777) Chapter 28 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1564093&postcount=3822) Chapter 29 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1567709&postcount=3860) Chapter 30 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1571971&postcount=3942)
Chapter 31 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1576010&postcount=4018) Chapter 32 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1581361&postcount=4087) Chapter 33 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1583194&postcount=4143) Chapter 34 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1586066&postcount=4203) Chapter 35 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1588286&postcount=4237) Chapter 36 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1590547&postcount=4274) Chapter 37 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1592707&postcount=4336) Chapter 38 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1594573&postcount=4371) Chapter 39 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1596368&postcount=4401), chapter 40 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1601880&postcount=4538),
Chapetr 41 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1602748&postcount=4560), Chapter 42 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1605773&postcount=4671), Chapter 43 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1606692&postcount=4709), Chapter 44 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1608466&postcount=4781), Chapter 45 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1609371&postcount=4818), Chapter 46 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1610217&postcount=4842), Chapter 47 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1612797&postcount=4910), Chapter 48 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1613721&postcount=4925), Chapter 49 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1614661&postcount=4936), Chapter 50 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1616540&postcount=4985)
Chapter 51 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1618388&postcount=5089), Chapter 52 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1620531&postcount=5285), Chapter 53 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1622769&postcount=5513), Chapter 54 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1626393&postcount=5827), Chapter 55 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1633879&postcount=6062), Chapter 56 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1640260&postcount=6233), Chapter 57 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1642879&postcount=6276), Chapter 58 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1657353&postcount=6473), Chapter 59 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1659416&postcount=6513), Chapter 60 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1661428&postcount=6525)
Chapter 61 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1663150&postcount=6546), Chapter 62 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1665259&postcount=6561), Chapter 63 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1667036&postcount=6579), Chapter 64 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1669202&postcount=6617), Chapter 65 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1671888&postcount=6628), Chapter 66 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1674681&postcount=6659), Chapter 67 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1682647&postcount=6733), Chapter 68 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1685224&postcount=6749), Chapter 69 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1687175&postcount=6772), Chapter 70 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1688983&postcount=6785)
Chapter 71 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1692230&postcount=6812), Chapter 72 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1705960&postcount=6950), Chapter 73 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1710966&postcount=7011), Chapter 74 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1714114&postcount=7069), Chapter 75 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1716891&postcount=7112), Chapter 76 (Final) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1727558&postcount=7244)
TitleNanoha/ MARVEL
Genre: Action
Summary: A cross over between the Nanoha Universe and the MARVEL Superheros Universe. 5 Jewel seed had fallen in hands of Supervillans like Red Skull & Dr. Doom, The TSAB must make an alliance with the Avenguers to stop them.
Rating: T
Links:
Chapter 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1584578&postcount=4182) Chapter 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1587178&postcount=4218) Chapter 3 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1600659&postcount=4490)
TitleRise of Techno - Union
Genre: Action/ Gore
Summary: A drawn comic of Nanoha & company facing their deadliest enemy. The Techno - Union Imperil attacked the Section 6, Nanoha, Fate, Vita and Signum must travel to this mysterious nation to clean the name of Hayate.
Rating: T
Links:
http://img513.imageshack.us/img513/7393/nrotuch10fov3.th.png (http://img513.imageshack.us/my.php?image=nrotuch10fov3.png)
The Machine's Assault (http://rapidshare.com/files/102092528/NROTU_ch_1_Machine_s_Assault.rar.html)
http://img412.imageshack.us/img412/6960/nrotuch20frontzt0.th.png (http://img412.imageshack.us/my.php?image=nrotuch20frontzt0.png)
Skyes of Vengance (http://rapidshare.com/files/109052897/NROTU_ch_2_Skyes_of_Vengance.rar.html)
http://img337.imageshack.us/img337/3466/nrotuch30frontjt6.th.png (http://img337.imageshack.us/my.php?image=nrotuch30frontjt6.png)
City of Demons (http://rapidshare.com/files/115329931/NROTU_ch_3_City_of_Demons.rar.html)
http://i278.photobucket.com/albums/kk86/EvilRick/th_NROTU_ch_4_0_Front.png (http://i278.photobucket.com/albums/kk86/EvilRick/NROTU_ch_4_0_Front.png)
Infiltration (http://www.badongo.com/file/9847207)
http://i278.photobucket.com/albums/kk86/EvilRick/th_NROTU_ch_5_0_Front.png (http://i278.photobucket.com/albums/kk86/EvilRick/NROTU_ch_5_0_Front.png)
Military Strength (http://www.badongo.com/file/10196984)
http://img337.imageshack.us/img337/9973/nrotuch60frontof9.th.png (http://img337.imageshack.us/my.php?image=nrotuch60frontof9.png)
Nightmare (http://www.badongo.com/file/10430223)
http://img208.imageshack.us/img208/6426/nrotuch70frontjm2.th.png (http://img208.imageshack.us/my.php?image=nrotuch70frontjm2.png)
Under Alert (http://www.badongo.com/file/10620518)
http://img510.imageshack.us/img510/7568/nrotuch80frontlm0.th.png (http://img510.imageshack.us/my.php?image=nrotuch80frontlm0.png)
The long way back home (http://www.badongo.com/file/10789209)
http://img208.imageshack.us/img208/7910/nrotuch90frontso5.th.png (http://img208.imageshack.us/my.php?image=nrotuch90frontso5.png)
The Machine Wars (http://www.badongo.com/file/11023211)
http://img84.imageshack.us/img84/8064/nrotuch100frontet8.th.png (http://img84.imageshack.us/my.php?image=nrotuch100frontet8.png)
The Demon Overlord (http://www.badongo.com/file/11248490)
http://img91.imageshack.us/img91/8465/nrotuch110frontal6.th.png (http://img91.imageshack.us/my.php?image=nrotuch110frontal6.png)
The four Ryders of Apocalypse (http://www.badongo.com/file/11376666)
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In the hands of the Death (http://rapidshare.com/files/151008019/NROTU_ch_12_In_the_hands_of_the_Death.zip.html)
http://img510.imageshack.us/img510/8284/nrotuch130fronttx9.th.png (http://img510.imageshack.us/my.php?image=nrotuch130fronttx9.png)
The Emperor (http://rapidshare.com/files/156673273/NROTU_ch_13_The_Emperor.zip.html)
http://img208.imageshack.us/img208/1080/nrotuch140frontum4.th.png (http://img208.imageshack.us/my.php?image=nrotuch140frontum4.png)
Vengefull Spirit (http://www.badongo.com/file/12019160)
Fanfiction.net profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/824419/Marine_Brother_Shran
Iron Knight (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3887203/1/Iron_Knight)
Genre: General
Summary: Oneshot, Vitacentric. I failed. I couldn't protect them. Hayate, everyone...I'm sorry. A little oneshot on what could've been going through Vita's mind, and if Hayate didn't come in time
Rating: K
Spiritual Garden (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3886914/1/Spiritual_Garden)
Genre: General
Summary: OneShot, FateOOC. Sometimes, it's the little things that are most precious. It is how we make of them that makes them precious, such as a simple outing, in a field of flowers.
Rating: K
Our Bridge (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3880732/1/Our_Bridge)
Genre: Romance
Main couple: Fate Nanoha
Summary: [Oneshot] In the past 14 years, this bridge has bared witnessed to three of our most treasured moments: Us becoming friends, us becoming a couple, and now, us becoming fiancées as I kneel before you and pop the question. Will you marry me, Nanoha?
Rating: K
Road of Love (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3854549/1/Road_of_Love)
Genre: Romance/Drama
Main couple: Fate Nanoha
Summary: Sometimes one had to fight to keep that relation going, and sometimes, one struggled to accept their own feelings, and the results of admitting those feelings to myself, and person of my feelings. This is my story, and the road I took to find love. [NF]
Rating: T
fanfiction.net profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1240368/Illidan182
The Desert's Trap (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4287965/1/The_Deserts_Trap)
Genre: Drama
Summary: Vita, Signum and Agito are deployed to a planet that holds memories for Vita and Nanoha. They are to meet with Fate and Hayate but non of them was told where to meet up, and mysterious criminal is after Fate and Hayate. Fatenum,NanoVita, Character death
Rating: T
Starlight Remembrance (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4275107/1/Starlight_Remembrance)
Genre: Spiritual/Hurt/Comfor
Summary: One peaceful night, on a hilltop near Mid's central ground forces HQ. Some memories are re-forged for a man lost to time. Zest Centric
Rating: K+
Landscaper!Fate (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4143068/7/Landscaper_Fate)
Genre: AU, Romance, Drama.
Summary: Fate has a life of hard work, raunchy comments, and a lingering past. Nanoha has a sheltered life, few friends, and a list of expectations of her. On the surface they should not even talk to each other. Their isolation, however, can make something deep happen between them.
Rating: M
Title:Maho Shoujo Lyrical Nanoha Alpha
Genre: OC, Drama, Action, Angst, Hurt/Comfort-
Summary: In the year MC 0083; Lies will be told, truth will be revealed, pain will be felt, comfort will be given, and the few and the proud will stand up against the galaxy's biggest threat.
Rating: T
Link: Chapter 1a (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1408486&postcount=1410), Chapter 1b (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1408486&postcount=1411), Chapter 2a (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1433093&postcount=1720), Chapter 2b (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1433098&postcount=1721)
Title: Medieval!Nanoha
Genre: Adventure/Action
Summary: Nanoha, a local farm girl, encounters one day a wounded boy named Yuuno, encounter which would change her life and history forever.
Rating: T
Links: Chapter 1; (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1547092&postcount=3631) Chapter 2; (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1557635&postcount=3714) Chapter 3 & Chapter 4; (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1586413&postcount=4210) Chapter 5; (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1661519&postcount=6528) Chapter 6; (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1667619&postcount=6590) Chapter 7; (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1702321&postcount=6906)
Keroko's Original Character profile: http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=938821&postcount=25
Title: Legend of Ancient Belka: Fall of an Empire
Genre: Drama/Action
Summary: The Belkan Empire stood for many a century, but as history has shown, no Empire lasts forever. As the last 'king' of the Empire, Vivio must stand between her Empire, and the many threats that wish to destroy it.
Rating: T
Link: Prologue, Chapter 1, Chapter 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1336339&postcount=4)
Fanfiction.net Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/52529/Seravy
Now or Never (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4012124/1/Now_or_never)
Genre: Romance/Angst
Main couple: Shamal, Signum
Summary: There had always been something between them but destiny had never allowed this blurry connection to be anything more. Shamal/Signum SHOUJO AI
Rating: T
Fanfiction.net profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1187108/Yggdra_Yuril_Artwaltz
School of Lyrical (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4000626/1/School_of_Lyrical)
Genre: Romance, OC
Summary: AU and OC. Fatecentric : The school lives of Nanoha & friends before the events of StrikerS. Original character in Rune Juril, a Enforcer friend of Fate's.
Rating:T
Arc-en-Ciel: Ashes unto Dust (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1343081&postcount=171)
Genre: Teaser
Ashes unto Dust (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4085298/1/Ashes_unto_Dust)
Genre:Adventure/Sci-Fi
Summary:A Arc-en-Ciel story. Following the close of the Scagletti case the TSAB soon encounters a new civilization, the Varista Empire. At first things are peaceful but then the gears of war begin to turn and the flames of war are kindled... OC-centric
Rating: M
FF.net profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1266843/
Our Mistress (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4037078/1/Our_Mistress)
Genre: General/Angst
Summary: 10 years after the events of StrikerS. Life with Hayate and the Wolkenritter.
Rating: T
Mercurian Angel has done a Valentine's comic, as well as many fanarts of fanfiction. You can visit her Deviant Art page (http://mercurianangel.deviantart.com/) for more.
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Emerald Bell (http://www.nanofate.net/?cat=8)
Genre: Romance, Doujinshi, Yuri
Summary: sequel to Saved by the Bell, Nanoha and Fate share a moment of love together.
Rating: Mature
Please click here for authors N-Z (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1705317&postcount=6941)
Title: The name of your fanfiction
genre: romance? Action?
Main couple: (can be left blank if not needed)
Summary: (a brief summary of this work, to grab people's attention)
Rating: K,T,M // P,PG,R ?
Link: a link to your fanfiction.net posting of story, or if it's only available on AnimeSuki then the link to your post.
If you have more than one chapter on AS, please provide links to each post. If you have one chapter spread apart multiple post, please gather them together and place them in a single post for the ease of the people reading (the fanfiction thread is a good place to post them!)
Also, if you have a post profiling your OCs, please include it as well so I can add it in your profile.
krisslanza
2008-01-10, 11:17
We... We can post right? :uhoh: I just noticed bad things went down last night and... Well er. Moving along.
This was posted in the (I guess old) thread but since it is locked and all. I'll like to remind people of something here: I didn't write this. This is written by my friend that is helping me with my little project here. I'll pass along all comments and such to him though of course. :nod:
Beauty on the Pyre
An Arc-en-Ciel teaser
Chapter One
Riding on the Winds of Change
There was something unsettling about this woman. The way she simply sighed and stared; gazing out the great glass window into the starlit sky. Of course, her circumstances were far from enviable…but that didn’t mean she had to be a bitch about it. “More wine?” Erika offered with a cheerful smile – as best as she could manage. She was torn, really, between hating the Erika von Cale she knew for being reduced to mollycoddling their honoured guest and relishing the challenge of finding out what made her tick. Erika bit on her thumb, wide eyed in anticipation of such a simple answer. The pause was insufferably pregnant.
“No…thanks.” She spoke! Erika’s eye twitched ever so slightly. For once, the Inquisitor had met her apparent match. With practiced habit, she brushed her dusty blonde hair out of her eyes and made to relax. It was…well, it was hard. You could almost feel the power coursing from her – backed up by a confidence that simply oozed from every pore in her body. Even here, effectively a prisoner like this woman was, and surrounded by the most impressive security features known to the Emperor she remained undaunted.
To tell the honest truth, Erika did not feel entirely safe. Years of instinct were screaming at her to run or fight or something! Anything but sit here and sip expensive drinks (though, Erika mused, the red was particularly fine). She licked her lips and poured herself another glass, raising it to her mouth. Fate Testarossa…what a unique, talented, arrogant, prideful little minx she was. Erika smiled to herself. She hated her.
I also finished the 2nd chapter of School of Lyrical and will be updating it on Fanfiction.net once I get back from my English class in a few hours.
And err... If we weren't meant to post like this. Sorry. :uhoh: *Flee*
*Cracks knuckles* Right, new thread, new start. Since I can't whip up a new fic in a few minutes, I'll start of with a repost. It's been months since I last worked on this story, so a little review of what happened might be a good idea. :heh:
Now, this story is intended to dive into Ancient Belka, which -being a non canonical setting- means that there will be OC's apearing next to the main cast. They will be introduced, though, and I'll make effort to keep them limited.
Legend of Ancient Belka: Fall of an Empire.
Carim sat down behind her desk with a sigh. Today had been a busy day; a group of Scrya’s had made an archeological discovery that had the potential to reveal much of the still hidden information on the history of Ancient Belka. She took a deep breath, and commed Schach.
“Can I help you, Knight Carim?”
“Yes, I was wondering if you could bring me some tea?”
“Ahh, long report to write?” Schach answered, half-guessing where this was going.
“Yes.”
“I’ll be there right away.”
Carim smiled as the screen closed. She could always count on Schach in these things. She shifted in her seat slightly as a new screen popped up, and after marking the date, she began to type.
Scryan archeologists have made an astonishing discovery today. In the ruins of a faraway enclave, a small group of Scrya’s had discovered a library of sorts. Quick investigations pointed out that it used to be Belkan in origin. Though most of it was empty, and what was left was almost destroyed in decay, a few precious documents had been found reasonably intact. Among these was mention of something that has the potential to shake our known history of the Ancient Belka to the core.
The documents spoke of many legendary figures, but also a word that we have, to this record, rarely encountered. The document spoke of the Primarch.
The Primarch are figures shrouded in the veil of history to this day. Legends and stories about them are abundant, but we are not sure which to believe. If this document is true, it could a key to unraveling the mystery behind the Primarchs.
Among one particular file of the documents we found a picture of a young woman.
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y191/Liinna/Nanoha/Alistina_torn.png
The picture is in remarkable condition, despite being damaged by the sands of time. It is to this point unsure what she has to do with the Primarchs, but from what little has been translated so far, it seems that she was of importance enough to be heavily weaved throughout the document. Some of our most talented linguists are working day and night to reveal the information that this young woman holds.
While we cannot be sure of anything, I am confident that this discovery will open the door to whole new realms of knowledge of the Ancient Belka.
Part 1: A burning vessel.
Hot.
It was so incredibly hot.
Fires were burning all around her, flames tearing away at the controls of what was once the greatest weapon of the Belkan Empire, burning the bodies of the fallen that lay scattered throughout the room. Flames that dried her tears as fast as they flowed from her eyes.
And yet, the heat of the flames barely registered even in the back of her mind, her thoughts focused on the girl she held in her arms.
So much blood. She had never really paid attention to it before, but was it really possible for a human being to lose this much blood?
No, she already knew the answer. It was possible for a human being to lose this much blood, but it was not possible to survive losing it.
Even for one such as her.
“Why?”
The girl tilted her head upwards, meeting her eyes. The very motion seemed to strain her to the extreme as her entire body seemed to shudder while making the attempt. Blue eyes met her own pair of mismatched ones, one green, one red, as the blood covered girl curved her mouth in a small smile.
“Because I had to.”
The words were like a dagger to her heart. Renewed tears fell from her eyes as her grip on the girl tightened.
“Why? Why did you have to? Because of your duty!? Because of your oath!?”
“Heh.” The girl’s body shuddered as the small chuckle escaped her lips. “When did I ever do things I did not want to do myself?”
“But why?” She repeated again. She wanted an answer. No, she needed an answer. She would not be able to live with herself if she never found out why.
Why did people die around her?
“You’re probably blaming yourself for what happened here.” mismatched eyes widened as the girl spoke again.
“You always do. No matter how you try to hide it behind your harsh attitude, you always blame yourself. What happened here was my choice and mine alone.” The girl smiled. “I am a selfish girl after all.”
“If only you hadn’t been assigned this duty.” She lowered her head in sadness and shame. This was her fault. It was for her that this had happened. For her that she had sacrificed herself.
A shudder coming from the girl’s body startled her out of the path her thoughts were taking as her worried eyes resettled on the girl in her arms. Another shudder, and the girl’s eyes closed in a wince as she suppressed another chuckle.
“See? Once again, duty duty duty. But I didn’t die here protecting ‘her royal majesty’.” The girl said, reopening her eyes. “I died here protecting my sister.”
“I don’t want you to die.” She said, holding back a choking sob.
“Nor do I. But if I know you will live, I am all right with it.” The girl’s blue eyes traveled upwards again, seeking her mismatched ones. “Will you live?”
At that moment, she wanted nothing more then to lie. To deny that she could make it out alive easily. Anything to prevent what she feared.
But the words came, even though she did not want to.
“Yes, I will live.”
The girl’s face softened, as if a great burden had been lifted. “Then, this is goodbye.”
Her eyes widened.
“Goodbye… Vivio…”
The girl’s eyes closed, and her body went limp in her arms. A lock of red hair slowly fell in front of the now closed eyes. Saint king Vivio Sakurazaki’s eyes slowly widened as realized what had just happened.
“…Alistina?”
She shook the body in her hands, refusing to accept the truth.
“Alistina? ALISTINA!”
But the blue eyes never opened. The saint king collapsed on the body in tears, not believing that the one person who had been at her side forever was now gone.
How had it come to this?
Chapter 02: Playing with politics
The Royal Palace, center of the Belkan Empire, its towers pointed high towards the sky. And at the moment, a field of battle.
Not a normal field of battle, oh no, many of the palace’s occupants knew how to handle a normal battle. This was a battle of a different kind, a battle where it does not matter how skilled you are with the sword, or how many enemies you have slain.
“This situation is unacceptable!”
This was a battle of words.
“According to your words, Lord Beckert.”
The council hall, possibly the biggest room in the palace itself. Surprisingly exotically decorated, and filled with one huge central table. Filling the table were politicians. Lords, ladies, senators, whichever ruled their respective territories. All were here in the council room to appeal their words the senate, and the king of Belka.
True, the Belkan Empire was an Empire, and as such the final say was made by the ruling person, but one person can only govern so much. The Belkan Empire stretched several worlds, which made the need for a bureaucracy apparent, though not any more liked.
“Do you not see?” A brown haired man with a short beard almost shouted through the great room. “We have finally taken the border country out of the hands of those wretched rebels. Many of our own have suffered severe financial difficulty thanks to that rebellious scum. The country should immediately start compensating us for our troubles.”
“But they had no choice; they were occupied by the enemy force. According to the reports their financial status is even worse then ours.” Another councilmember protested.
“They should be thankful that we even bothered to drive the rebels from their lands. I still say that we simply should have brought out the Cradle and-”
“That would be enough, Lord Beckert.”
All heads turned into the direction of the king, or rather the person next to the king. Long red hair flowing behind her, blue eyes piercing the lord in question.
“This talk on what could have been done is pointless. What has happened has happened, we have reclaimed a country that was taken away from us, that is all. To demand gratitude of them would be beyond stupidity.”
A different council member, a young long haired blonde man, decided to voice his opinion on the matter. “But lady Alistina, surely you agree that we cannot simply excuse them? From what I heard, they offered only little resistance against the rebel forces.”
“Would you do any different, councilor Torië, if your family was threatened to be killed on the spot? Regardless, to the people in that country, all that has happened is that they changed rule yet again. We must be sure to keep their loyalty, so that we have to station less forces to keep the place under control.”
Lord Beckert snorted. “If they have realized that their rule has changed, they should know that their laws have changed. That is all.”
“That would be like inviting the rebel forces back into the country. We need to gain their loyalty, Lord Beckert, not lose it.”
“And requesting compensation for rescuing them would do so?”
Lady Alistina shook her head. “Tell a conquered man he has a new master, and he'll shrug. Tell him his new master demands a fifth of his annual income, and he'll go and find his pitchfork.”
For a moment it seemed as if Lord Beckert would continue the argument, but to many of the room’s occupant’s surprise, he sat back down. Lord Beckert’s features changed little as he sat back down, save for a nigh undetectable twitch in his right eye.
A twitch that did not escape the king.
“Very well Lady Alistina, you have made your point. We shall give this country a while to catch its breath, and for us to gain their trust.”
The king’s decision was made, the debate was over. As it always went, the occupants in the room had been arguing back and forth for quite a while before the king finally made her decision.
Her decision.
One would expect a king to be a man, a proud man who would lead his people through the light and dark days that their lands faced. Who would take up the sword and smash any evil that opposed him and his subjects.
Perhaps that is why she was called a king.
The Belkan Empire was lead by a king, as it had always been. The Saint King of Belka. The royal blood of the empire. The current king had all the qualities of her predecessors, and also had a beautiful face. And until recently the Empire had flourished under her rule as it had always.
Therefore no one questioned the king’s gender.
~~~
Later that evening, the king and Lady Alistina were waking through the corridors of the grand palace.
“You played a dangerous game today, Alistina.”
Alistina sighed. “These are politics, Vivio. Every word you speak is a dangerous game.”
The king sighed. “How often must I tell you that I do not wish to be called by that name?”
“Why not? I’ve been calling you that since forever. Besides, it’s your name, isn’t it? Saint king Vivio Sakura Zaki, king of the Belkan Empire.” Alistina said dramatically.
“It is a child’s name, at least call me Sakura.”
“Never.” Alistina replied with a grin.
‘Vivio’ surpressed a frustrated cry, and decided to shift the subject. “Back to the matter of the council, you were taunting them the entire time, what will you do if Lord Beckert decides to retaliate?”
“You’re worried about Beckert? He’s the least of our worries. He’s a warrior through and through, strong and opposing, and he obviously knew when to back down, but he lacks the skill with words. He can do little more then bark in the council hall. No, I’m far more worried about Torië.”
“Councilor Torië? I do not see why you are worried about him; he has been quite helpful these last few weeks.”
Alistina shook her head. “Vivio, you are a great knights, and a great leader, but you are just as bad as Beckert when it comes to politics.”
“What do you mean?” Vivio asked, slightly upset at her skills being put down like that.
“Not counting me, Torië is one of the youngest members of the council. He holds no prestigious lineage, and he has no title to speak off. For someone like him to have reached a post as important like this at such an age means that he knows every trick, every flaw, and every exploit in the world of politics. Someone like him would literally go over corpses to gain more power.” Alistina explained.
“Alistina, you do realize that that is a very serious accusation?” Vivio queried.
“But a very accurate one.” Alistina responded. “You noticed what he said in the council hall today? It sounded very polite, but it was actually him probing how far he could push things around in a serious situation.”
“I see…” Vivio responded thoughtfully. “So how do you suggest we handle him?”
“Dump a potato sack over his head, tie him up and kick him into the deepest hole we can find.”
Vivio jerked to a halt and turned to observe the red haired girl’s face with incredulous eyes. To her credit, Alistina actually managed to keep her face straight for a few seconds before she broke down in a laughing fit.
“Oh this is great. You should have seen the incredulous look on your face.”
Vivio’s eyes settled in a glare as she placed her hands on her hips. “This is a serious matter Alistina, it is not something to joke around with.”
“Duty, duty, duty. Relax, we’re not in the council hall anymore. Besides, there is nothing we can do about him at the moment.”
Vivio tried to keep the glare on her face, but soon she sighed and let her hands slump to her side. “At times like I find it very hard to believe we actually share the same genes.”
Alistina grinned. “Genes don’t make the person. Now come on, let’s go get some rest. My brothers should be returning tomorrow, and I doubt they will be the bringers of good news.”
Next chapter, Meetings and brothers.
Edit: We... We can post right? :uhoh: I just noticed bad things went down last night and... Well er. Moving along.
This was posted in the (I guess old) thread but since it is locked and all. I'll like to remind people of something here: I didn't write this. This is written by my friend that is helping me with my little project here. I'll pass along all comments and such to him though of course. :nod:
Beauty on the Pyre
An Arc-en-Ciel teaser
Chapter One
Riding on the Winds of Change
There was something unsettling about this woman. The way she simply sighed and stared; gazing out the great glass window into the starlit sky. Of course, her circumstances were far from enviable…but that didn’t mean she had to be a bitch about it. “More wine?” Erika offered with a cheerful smile – as best as she could manage. She was torn, really, between hating the Erika von Cale she knew for being reduced to mollycoddling their honoured guest and relishing the challenge of finding out what made her tick. Erika bit on her thumb, wide eyed in anticipation of such a simple answer. The pause was insufferably pregnant.
“No…thanks.” She spoke! Erika’s eye twitched ever so slightly. For once, the Inquisitor had met her apparent match. With practiced habit, she brushed her dusty blonde hair out of her eyes and made to relax. It was…well, it was hard. You could almost feel the power coursing from her – backed up by a confidence that simply oozed from every pore in her body. Even here, effectively a prisoner like this woman was, and surrounded by the most impressive security features known to the Emperor she remained undaunted.
To tell the honest truth, Erika did not feel entirely safe. Years of instinct were screaming at her to run or fight or something! Anything but sit here and sip expensive drinks (though, Erika mused, the red was particularly fine). She licked her lips and poured herself another glass, raising it to her mouth. Fate Testarossa…what a unique, talented, arrogant, prideful little minx she was. Erika smiled to herself. She hated her.
I also finished the 2nd chapter of School of Lyrical and will be updating it on Fanfiction.net once I get back from my English class in a few hours.
And err... If we weren't meant to post like this. Sorry. :uhoh: *Flee*
Fate imprissoned? Empreror? Questions are raised, none are answered. As a hint, it would be handy to make sure the next chapter caries a more detailed introduction on Erika, perhaps only the basics (apearance) but maybe more detailed (apearance, short past, personallity). That way we get a better feel of the character.
krisslanza
2008-01-10, 12:29
Well to be fair Keroko it was meant to be a teaser... :nod: So it was meant to be short enough to grasp your attention and get that exact reaction you just went through. So it worked. Bwhahahahahahah. :eyespin: And I'm sure in the full chapter you'd know Erika's full looks :heh:
But I'll pass along those comments when he signs back in. Working on uploading School of Lyrical 2 (Which means typing it) then I'll take a peek at what you posted. :nod:
SpaceBrotha
2008-01-10, 13:37
How do i killed thread? :uhoh:
that'll teach me to listen to the mods and not get involved in random snowballs rolling downhill... :p
anyway, @keroko: is it just a coincidence that Alistinas picture bears a huge resemblance to your own avatar? ;)
also, primarchs, the moment i read that i got the mental image of big burly men from WH40k, then the picture you attached came along for a mental image clash of the century, causing me to lock down for several seconds :twitch:... but i got better, really wish there was more though as the premise is interesting. well, as long as no emperors come around anyway... :D
@Keroko: What's the name of that story?
Lyrical Days update will be on hold for a day while I situate myself. Next chapter of Saved by the bell should be started on tonight :D
Also, if post here and have your Nanoha stories on FF.N, let me know so I can add you to my list. If you post stories here and don't have them on FF.N.... I'm trying to work out a system that could work :heh:
krisslanza
2008-01-10, 14:13
Ow, ow. Sore arm sore arm... *cough*
So I finished the 2nd chapter of School of Lyrical. It is officially my longest piece of writing ever for a chapter at 2,364 words.
Enjoy it please? ^^;
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4000626/2/School_of_Lyrical
Eagle8819
2008-01-10, 14:23
Broken link there. Any FF links with the word secure and live preview is accessible to the author alone. Click on your FF bio (and hope you did not click before adding the chapter) to find the right link. :heh:
And Satashi-san works fast. I hadn't even sent in a pm yet. :heh: :heh:
Also, if post here and have your Nanoha stories on FF.N, let me know so I can add you to my list. If you post stories here and don't have them on FF.N.... I'm trying to work out a system that could work :heh:
I think post count links at the top right corner of that certain specific post works?
But as a random suggestion to make it neater...cut out the author's comments line? Unless if it's specifically requested, I don't think there's a real need for it. But that's just me. I don't have any specific comments to make, since I'm used to rambling in fics itself.
Ignis Fatuus (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3967522/1/Ignis_Fatuus)
Genre: Drama/Romance
Main couple: Fate, Nanoha
Summary: If things were not what they seem to be. An illusion. A misleading truth. Is there even a truth? AU fiction. FateNanoha.
Rating:T
I did suggest bolding and italizing too, but then that did be too much work. Point in fact, I think it is already too much work... *gives e-cookie to Satashi*
krisslanza
2008-01-10, 14:25
Oh whoops, thanks there. I fixed the link :heh: Now to read some stuff 'ere...
anyway, @keroko: is it just a coincidence that Alistinas picture bears a huge resemblance to your own avatar? ;)
Well... yes and no. It's a bit complicated. You see, the girl in my avatar is my main OC, Keroko, so they are not the same girls. Storywise, however, Alistina is a sort of 'link' between Vivio and Keroko, as Keroko reminds Vivio of Alistina. But that's OC-thread stuff and doesnt really have much to do with this story.
also, primarchs, the moment i read that i got the mental image of big burly men from WH40k, then the picture you attached came along for a mental image clash of the century, causing me to lock down for several seconds :twitch:... but i got better, really wish there was more though as the premise is interesting. well, as long as no emperors come around anyway... :D
Funny thing is, the Primarchs in Fall of an Empire were inspired by the 40K Primarchs. :3
@Keroko: What's the name of that story?
Whoops, I forgot. :heh:
The full title is 'Legend of Ancient Belka: Fall of an Empire', mostly shortened to 'Fall of an Empire.'
Eagle, Kriz, I'll comment on your stories later, promise.
krisslanza
2008-01-10, 15:13
I remember the second chapter of that Keroko. It is good stuff, I like it. :nod:
It's interesting and well described :heh: I think I shift too much from a second and third person point of view in my own writings.
ghazghkull
2008-01-10, 17:59
Have you forgotten my story already Satashi-sama?!
I'm hurt! XD
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3854549/1/Road_of_Love
There. Now my issue has been sated.
Enjoy it please? ^^;
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4000626/2/School_of_Lyrical
Alright. I read it. And I did.
Good piece, Kriss. =3
krisslanza
2008-01-10, 18:35
Wow the Nanoha section is either heavily frequented or my works are actually getting a name for themselves considering I've broken the 200 hit mark faster then ever before. I used to be able to refresh every few minutes and see the hits going up!
All the comments make me very happy. Makes my time of writing it all out very much worth it. :nod:
Chapter 3 won't be up until at least Monday. I think I'll drop by college to use their webz tomorrow, but I won't be done with it by then (I haven't even started it yet). Again this is not set in stone; at EARLIEST Monday. But it could be a longer wait. But I am aiming for a Monday release, failing that Tuesday... And so on.
Once School of Lyrical is done I'll begin work on my... I guess you can call it masterpiece project :heh: A big word I know, but I don't think I've written anything of the scale I am imagining it to be. The overall thing me and my partner in crime dubbed 'Arc-en-Ciel', and you saw a snippet of the 'series' from the Varista point of view (From Erika von Cale's eyes). Mine would be seeing the stuff from the TSAB's view through Rune's eyes.
I hope it'll be epic :nod: :heh: But it is a ways off. A lot of work to do... If you want, I can ask my partner if he wants to have chapter 1 done as a teaser or something :heh:
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On that note, I'm going to start writing on my fics now ^^;
Fast Lyrical Days. Sorry it's not too long but I want to start on SbTB as well tonight.
I was never really one to shop for girls but Nanoha's comment this morning was still bothering me. I knew she was just teasing but there was still something in the way she said it, some faint hint of sadness, that I couldn't help but pick up on. This thought ran over in my mind again and again as I looked at what was before me. Nothing caught my eye right away and I almost gave up on the store before finding something that looked promising. The glass jewelry cases in the middle of the store grabbed my attention, or rather a bracelet inside of it did. A medium sized linked silver bracelet was sparkling in the light almost as if calling out to me. On it was one matching silver charm in the shape of a heart.
'A charm bracelet,' I realized, looking at the several types of charms that could be added to it. 'Simple, pretty, shiny, and it just screams Nanoha.' I stood up straight and met the clerk's eye to call them over to me and ten minutes later I was back out in the cold, now fifty dollars lighter. Although the blow to my wallet stung, I was rather pleased with my purchase. Nanoha was always there for me, it was about time I showed my appreciation.
“I'm home!” I called out as always when I opened the door to the house I now shared with two girls.
Nanoha, as always, came to me with a smile. “Welcome home. You hungry?”
“Starving.” My reply seemed to make her happy. “Something smells good.”
“Pizza,” The girl informed me while rocking on her heels while waiting on me to finish taking off my shoes. “How was Hayate-chan?”
“A lot better.” Walking in, I held up the bag so she could see it. “I have something for you.”
“Oh?” Her face lit with curiosity. “What is it?”
“It's a box.” I took out the long slender jewelry case and held back a chuckle at Nanoha's reaction to cover her mouth in surprise. “Sure are happy about a box.”
“What's in it?” She reached for it and pouted when I moved it away. Trying again, she stood on her tip toes and reached for the case when I held it up. “Stop teasing me!”
“But it's fun.” I let her try once again before bringing it down and handing it to her. “Here, I hope you like.”
“I will,” She assured me before happily clicking open the case and fawning over the simple gift. “Awwwww, it's so kyute!”
“...Did you just say 'kyute'?”
“What on Earth made you buy me a gift?” She sounded happier than I've heard her in the past month or so. “Aw, I love it. A little heart and everything.” The bracelet was put on and looked at again now that it was on her wrist. “Thank you!” I got a tight hug, which I returned.
“I just thought I'd get it for you. No reason really.”
“You're the best.” To my surprise Nanoha got on her tiptoes and pecked my cheek. “Thanks a lot.”
“Welcome.” I touched the spot I was kissed and felt my lips turn up lightly to a smile. “You haven't kissed me in ages.”
“Well, if you would do things to warrant it, I'd kiss you more often.” She had a faint tint of blush on her cheeks, keeping her eyes on the sparking bracelet still. She stared at it for a moment longer before suddenly gasping out. “The pizza!” Quickly she ran to the kitchen and pulled the oven door open, quickly taking out the food. “Oh thank goodness, it's just a little brown on top.” Sliding it onto a cutting board, she went to dust her peel with corn starch before slipping the next one onto it. “Yuuno-kun, this one is yours. It'll take about six minutes so get comfortable and I'll bring it to you when it's done okay?”
“Hmmm....” I hopped on the kitchen counter instead and watched her. “It's quiet tonight, where's Fate at?”
“She ate dinner and conked out. Said she had a hard day.” The girl closed the oven door and walked over to me. Turning around, she faced the same way I was and leaned back against me, pulling my arms to wrap around her front. “It's a little chilly in here.”
“Put on clothes.” I teased. The girl was in her pajamas, which consisted of nothing more than a large shirt that went to her knees.
“But this is comfortable.” She protested while playing with my hands, eyes still darting to the gift she was wearing. “And you're warm.”
“Keep moving my hands like that and I'll end up feeling you up.”
“I don't mind,” She replied airily. “Go for it.”
“...I really will if you say that.”
“Then do it.”
“...I'm not in the mood.”
“Sure,” She giggled to herself and I couldn't help but chuckle. “Ne, question?”
“Yes?”
Nanoha looked over her shoulder at me. “Am I feminine?”
“What do you mean?” I blinked. “Such a sudden question.”
“Hm. Well,” She thought about it. “I kind of get love letters every now and then, but they are normally from people I don't even know. I have a fanclub you know?”
“I know.” I hated those guys. A group of about fifteen that basically worshiped the ground Nanoha walked on.
“But besides those, I don't really get any attention. Am I not feminine enough? Am I attractive?” I pondered it, allowing her to turn around in my arms and look at me. “Even you don't ever look at me when you have the chance.”
“I look at you all the time.”
“Not when I'm naked.”
I blinked. “You want me to look at you naked?”
“No!” She shook her head. “I mean when the situation comes up, when I walk across the hall in only a towel or something. Your eyes never once dropped to look. Am I not feminine?”
Acting on impulse, I reached forward and popped the top snap-buttons on Nanoha's shirt open, revealing her breast fully. “Hmmm.... I give you about an eight.”
Her face slowly turned scarlet but stood there a full five seconds before letting out a 'kya!' and turning around to button them. “Pervert!”
“Yup. I get that way around very feminine women.”
Nanoha slowed down her buttoning and looked back over at me, smiling. “I'll forgive you this time.”
“Thank you,” I teased back.
“But next time,” She winked. “I might just slap you.”
“You want a next time?”
“Maybe, nyaha!” With that she went over to the oven and checked my food. I didn't understand girls sometimes, but right now I could tell Nanoha was happy. She really wanted attention and a little encouragement that she was pretty. I had given her both tonight and her smile was really cute right now. It was this simple moment that made me glad we shared a house together.
~**~
Sunday again; a day off with nothing to do. From the burning smell of death coming from my door I could tell Fate was trying to make breakfast. After a glance out my window I saw Nanoha outside playing in the snow. I knew already that Hayate was going to be shopping today so she could get out of the house. As for me...
A.) Nanoha was so happy last night, I really should treat her to something today to make sure she knows that I appreciate her.
B.) I did say I would take Fate out sometime... but since I bought a gift, it will be a cheap date, would she even like that?
C.) I can probably meet up with Hayate for lunch, if I don't die from Fate's breakfast. A good meal sounds good.
FlareKnight
2008-01-10, 21:54
I was never really one to shop for girls but Nanoha's comment this morning was still bothering me. I knew she was just teasing but there was still something in the way she said it, some faint hint of sadness, that I couldn't help but pick up on. This thought ran over in my mind again and again as I looked at what was before me. Nothing caught my eye right away and I almost gave up on the store before finding something that looked promising. The glass jewelry cases in the middle of the store grabbed my attention, or rather a bracelet inside of it did. A medium sized linked silver bracelet was sparkling in the light almost as if calling out to me. On it was one matching silver charm in the shape of a heart.
'A charm bracelet,' I realized, looking at the several types of charms that could be added to it. 'Simple, pretty, shiny, and it just screams Nanoha.' I stood up straight and met the clerk's eye to call them over to me and ten minutes later I was back out in the cold, now fifty dollars lighter. Although the blow to my wallet stung, I was rather pleased with my purchase. Nanoha was always there for me, it was about time I showed my appreciation.
“I'm home!” I called out as always when I opened the door to the house I now shared with two girls.
Nanoha, as always, came to me with a smile. “Welcome home. You hungry?”
“Starving.” My reply seemed to make her happy. “Something smells good.”
“Pizza,” The girl informed me while rocking on her heels while waiting on me to finish taking off my shoes. “How was Hayate-chan?”
“A lot better.” Walking in, I held up the bag so she could see it. “I have something for you.”
“Oh?” Her face lit with curiosity. “What is it?”
“It's a box.” I took out the long slender jewelry case and held back a chuckle at Nanoha's reaction to cover her mouth in surprise. “Sure are happy about a box.”
“What's in it?” She reached for it and pouted when I moved it away. Trying again, she stood on her tip toes and reached for the case when I held it up. “Stop teasing me!”
“But it's fun.” I let her try once again before bringing it down and handing it to her. “Here, I hope you like.”
“I will,” She assured me before happily clicking open the case and fawning over the simple gift. “Awwwww, it's so kyute!”
“...Did you just say 'kyute'?”
“What on Earth made you buy me a gift?” She sounded happier than I've heard her in the past month or so. “Aw, I love it. A little heart and everything.” The bracelet was put on and looked at again now that it was on her wrist. “Thank you!” I got a tight hug, which I returned.
“I just thought I'd get it for you. No reason really.”
“You're the best.” To my surprise Nanoha got on her tiptoes and pecked my cheek. “Thanks a lot.”
“Welcome.” I touched the spot I was kissed and felt my lips turn up lightly to a smile. “You haven't kissed me in ages.”
“Well, if you would do things to warrant it, I'd kiss you more often.” She had a faint tint of blush on her cheeks, keeping her eyes on the sparking bracelet still. She stared at it for a moment longer before suddenly gasping out. “The pizza!” Quickly she ran to the kitchen and pulled the oven door open, quickly taking out the food. “Oh thank goodness, it's just a little brown on top.” Sliding it onto a cutting board, she went to dust her peel with corn starch before slipping the next one onto it. “Yuuno-kun, this one is yours. It'll take about six minutes so get comfortable and I'll bring it to you when it's done okay?”
“Hmmm....” I hopped on the kitchen counter instead and watched her. “It's quiet tonight, where's Fate at?”
“She ate dinner and conked out. Said she had a hard day.” The girl closed the oven door and walked over to me. Turning around, she faced the same way I was and leaned back against me, pulling my arms to wrap around her front. “It's a little chilly in here.”
“Put on clothes.” I teased. The girl was in her pajamas, which consisted of nothing more than a large shirt that went to her knees.
“But this is comfortable.” She protested while playing with my hands, eyes still darting to the gift she was wearing. “And you're warm.”
“Keep moving my hands like that and I'll end up feeling you up.”
“I don't mind,” She replied airily. “Go for it.”
“...I really will if you say that.”
“Then do it.”
“...I'm not in the mood.”
“Sure,” She giggled to herself and I couldn't help but chuckle. “Ne, question?”
“Yes?”
Nanoha looked over her shoulder at me. “Am I feminine?”
“What do you mean?” I blinked. “Such a sudden question.”
“Hm. Well,” She thought about it. “I kind of get love letters every now and then, but they are normally from people I don't even know. I have a fanclub you know?”
“I know.” I hated those guys. A group of about fifteen that basically worshiped the ground Nanoha walked on.
“But besides those, I don't really get any attention. Am I not feminine enough? Am I attractive?” I pondered it, allowing her to turn around in my arms and look at me. “Even you don't ever look at me when you have the chance.”
“I look at you all the time.”
“Not when I'm naked.”
I blinked. “You want me to look at you naked?”
“No!” She shook her head. “I mean when the situation comes up, when I walk across the hall in only a towel or something. Your eyes never once dropped to look. Am I not feminine?”
Acting on impulse, I reached forward and popped the top snap-buttons on Nanoha's shirt open, revealing her breast fully. “Hmmm.... I give you about an eight.”
Her face slowly turned scarlet but stood there a full five seconds before letting out a 'kya!' and turning around to button them. “Pervert!”
“Yup. I get that way around very feminine women.”
Nanoha slowed down her buttoning and looked back over at me, smiling. “I'll forgive you this time.”
“Thank you,” I teased back.
“But next time,” She winked. “I might just slap you.”
“You want a next time?”
“Maybe, nyaha!” With that she went over to the oven and checked my food. I didn't understand girls sometimes, but right now I could tell Nanoha was happy. She really wanted attention and a little encouragement that she was pretty. I had given her both tonight and her smile was really cute right now. It was this simple moment that made me glad we shared a house together.
~**~
Sunday again; a day off with nothing to do. From the burning smell of death coming from my door I could tell Fate was trying to make breakfast. After a glance out my window I saw Nanoha outside playing in the snow. I knew already that Hayate was going to be shopping today so she could get out of the house. As for me...
A.) Nanoha was so happy last night, I really should treat her to something today to make sure she knows that I appreciate her.
B.) I did say I would take Fate out sometime... but since I bought a gift, it will be a cheap date, would she even like that?
C.) I can probably meet up with Hayate for lunch, if I don't die from Fate's breakfast. A good meal sounds good.
Well that present worked out just fine :D. Yuuno has an interesting way of reassuring a girl of her femininity. A good result overall for that area. Poor Fate her cooking referred to as "the burning smell of death."
Glad that Nanoha is looking a little better. Leaving her alone too much could have taken things to a bad place. As always quite the relationship going on with Yuuno there.
Now for the next course of action. Has been a while since doing something with Fate. Just ignoring her isn't going to help things all that much. Have done plenty with Hayate so can spend a turn doing what we can elsewhere. Somehow don't think Fate would care that much how much money was spent on the date. So will go B this time. Though I'm not sure when I picked the winning one last...hmm Maybe I'm out of touch.
Hehe, just remember kids, if you ignore a girl long enough, you get flashed! :heh:
And in case anyone was wondering, yeah, if you skipped buying a present last choice you go on an expensive date.
*mulls* Augh, damnit. Such hard choices for once.
*thinks*
*thinks more.*
*rapid headbashing*
Got it!
I'll go B.
Fate just strikes me as a person who wouldn't mind too much about the price of the Date. But then again, I could be wrong.
C
Saludos, Haru
You like Hayate route, huh? XDD I thought you wasn't reading this, Haru?
Edit: First page claim!
You like Hayate route, huh? XDD I thought you wasn't reading this, Haru?
I'm not reading it since it can have a bad end (Fate or Nanoha X someone else), but I'll read it if we get the good NanoFate end, that's why I'm checking the alternatives and choosing the ones that I think will lead to the desired final, since you are not going to tell me directly what I must choose for that route.
EDIT:
Edit: First page claim!
Not a page claim if you selected to see 40 posts per page instead of 20
And BTW, I don't have nothing against you Hayuuno :)
Saludos, Haru
SpaceBrotha
2008-01-10, 23:38
You like Hayate route, huh? XDD I thought you wasn't reading this, Haru?
Edit: First page claim!
He doesn't need to read it to see the options :)
now, i'm also voting C
On a sadder note i think i'll be refraining from reading any new fics for a while, i already got a few of the backgrounds they have for Fate mixed up... which confused me while reading lyrical days... :(
...or it's the pain medication from my tooth removal, either way, i'll be refraining to the three satashi writes for a few days at least... :sad:
Fuyu no Sora
2008-01-11, 00:33
Edit: First page claim!
So....we're still at it with the page-claiming thing? :heh::heh::heh::heh:
What to do, what to do..... A will most probably lead us somewhere interesting but we can't really ignore Fate.... Hayate needs some checking too since she could over-exert herself and fall sick again....
I'll refrain from making a decision for now and will vote once I re-check the current status of all three girls, seeing who's the one who should get the least neglected for this choice :D
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On that note, I'm going to start writing on my fics now ^^;
Fast Lyrical Days. Sorry it's not too long but I want to start on SbTB as well tonight.
I was never really one to shop for girls but Nanoha's comment this morning was still bothering me. I knew she was just teasing but there was still something in the way she said it, some faint hint of sadness, that I couldn't help but pick up on. This thought ran over in my mind again and again as I looked at what was before me. Nothing caught my eye right away and I almost gave up on the store before finding something that looked promising. The glass jewelry cases in the middle of the store grabbed my attention, or rather a bracelet inside of it did. A medium sized linked silver bracelet was sparkling in the light almost as if calling out to me. On it was one matching silver charm in the shape of a heart.
'A charm bracelet,' I realized, looking at the several types of charms that could be added to it. 'Simple, pretty, shiny, and it just screams Nanoha.' I stood up straight and met the clerk's eye to call them over to me and ten minutes later I was back out in the cold, now fifty dollars lighter. Although the blow to my wallet stung, I was rather pleased with my purchase. Nanoha was always there for me, it was about time I showed my appreciation.
“I'm home!” I called out as always when I opened the door to the house I now shared with two girls.
Nanoha, as always, came to me with a smile. “Welcome home. You hungry?”
“Starving.” My reply seemed to make her happy. “Something smells good.”
“Pizza,” The girl informed me while rocking on her heels while waiting on me to finish taking off my shoes. “How was Hayate-chan?”
“A lot better.” Walking in, I held up the bag so she could see it. “I have something for you.”
“Oh?” Her face lit with curiosity. “What is it?”
“It's a box.” I took out the long slender jewelry case and held back a chuckle at Nanoha's reaction to cover her mouth in surprise. “Sure are happy about a box.”
“What's in it?” She reached for it and pouted when I moved it away. Trying again, she stood on her tip toes and reached for the case when I held it up. “Stop teasing me!”
“But it's fun.” I let her try once again before bringing it down and handing it to her. “Here, I hope you like.”
“I will,” She assured me before happily clicking open the case and fawning over the simple gift. “Awwwww, it's so kyute!”
“...Did you just say 'kyute'?”
“What on Earth made you buy me a gift?” She sounded happier than I've heard her in the past month or so. “Aw, I love it. A little heart and everything.” The bracelet was put on and looked at again now that it was on her wrist. “Thank you!” I got a tight hug, which I returned.
“I just thought I'd get it for you. No reason really.”
“You're the best.” To my surprise Nanoha got on her tiptoes and pecked my cheek. “Thanks a lot.”
“Welcome.” I touched the spot I was kissed and felt my lips turn up lightly to a smile. “You haven't kissed me in ages.”
“Well, if you would do things to warrant it, I'd kiss you more often.” She had a faint tint of blush on her cheeks, keeping her eyes on the sparking bracelet still. She stared at it for a moment longer before suddenly gasping out. “The pizza!” Quickly she ran to the kitchen and pulled the oven door open, quickly taking out the food. “Oh thank goodness, it's just a little brown on top.” Sliding it onto a cutting board, she went to dust her peel with corn starch before slipping the next one onto it. “Yuuno-kun, this one is yours. It'll take about six minutes so get comfortable and I'll bring it to you when it's done okay?”
“Hmmm....” I hopped on the kitchen counter instead and watched her. “It's quiet tonight, where's Fate at?”
“She ate dinner and conked out. Said she had a hard day.” The girl closed the oven door and walked over to me. Turning around, she faced the same way I was and leaned back against me, pulling my arms to wrap around her front. “It's a little chilly in here.”
“Put on clothes.” I teased. The girl was in her pajamas, which consisted of nothing more than a large shirt that went to her knees.
“But this is comfortable.” She protested while playing with my hands, eyes still darting to the gift she was wearing. “And you're warm.”
“Keep moving my hands like that and I'll end up feeling you up.”
“I don't mind,” She replied airily. “Go for it.”
“...I really will if you say that.”
“Then do it.”
“...I'm not in the mood.”
“Sure,” She giggled to herself and I couldn't help but chuckle. “Ne, question?”
“Yes?”
Nanoha looked over her shoulder at me. “Am I feminine?”
“What do you mean?” I blinked. “Such a sudden question.”
“Hm. Well,” She thought about it. “I kind of get love letters every now and then, but they are normally from people I don't even know. I have a fanclub you know?”
“I know.” I hated those guys. A group of about fifteen that basically worshiped the ground Nanoha walked on.
“But besides those, I don't really get any attention. Am I not feminine enough? Am I attractive?” I pondered it, allowing her to turn around in my arms and look at me. “Even you don't ever look at me when you have the chance.”
“I look at you all the time.”
“Not when I'm naked.”
I blinked. “You want me to look at you naked?”
“No!” She shook her head. “I mean when the situation comes up, when I walk across the hall in only a towel or something. Your eyes never once dropped to look. Am I not feminine?”
Acting on impulse, I reached forward and popped the top snap-buttons on Nanoha's shirt open, revealing her breast fully. “Hmmm.... I give you about an eight.”
Her face slowly turned scarlet but stood there a full five seconds before letting out a 'kya!' and turning around to button them. “Pervert!”
“Yup. I get that way around very feminine women.”
Nanoha slowed down her buttoning and looked back over at me, smiling. “I'll forgive you this time.”
“Thank you,” I teased back.
“But next time,” She winked. “I might just slap you.”
“You want a next time?”
“Maybe, nyaha!” With that she went over to the oven and checked my food. I didn't understand girls sometimes, but right now I could tell Nanoha was happy. She really wanted attention and a little encouragement that she was pretty. I had given her both tonight and her smile was really cute right now. It was this simple moment that made me glad we shared a house together.
~**~
Sunday again; a day off with nothing to do. From the burning smell of death coming from my door I could tell Fate was trying to make breakfast. After a glance out my window I saw Nanoha outside playing in the snow. I knew already that Hayate was going to be shopping today so she could get out of the house. As for me...
A.) Nanoha was so happy last night, I really should treat her to something today to make sure she knows that I appreciate her.
B.) I did say I would take Fate out sometime... but since I bought a gift, it will be a cheap date, would she even like that?
C.) I can probably meet up with Hayate for lunch, if I don't die from Fate's breakfast. A good meal sounds good.
8/10 ? Eh Yuuno, could have rated higher if you are going to "compliment" her :heh:
I enjoyed this chapter quite a bit, and it is nice to see Nanoha feeling happy as well. Yuuno sure doesn't realize how good he has it there. As for the choices ... whoo boy, a tough call between A and B. A could lead to something interesting (and risque :p), but Fate needs some attention as well. I don't think she would care about money at all (not like she is spoiled in this aspect) and would be just happy to spend time with Yuuno. I think he should forget Hayate for now and focus on his "domestic problems" :p
Lets see ... we probably scored a lot of points with Nanoha, which means her affection should be pretty high ... since Fate is high on the affection meter as well, makes me wonder: doesn't it only get worse if we keep shuffling between the girls and boosting points with both in the long run ? One is going to have a heartbreak sooner or later ... and the later it seems, the bigger it is likely to be.
Ok ... gah. Nanoha and Yuuno make for a cute couple and i like her antics, but in the end Fate needs some attention as well, and it is not good to leave promises hanging. B
I'm not reading it since it can have a bad end (Fate or Nanoha X someone else), but I'll read it if we get the good NanoFate end
Thats ... some pretty "interesting" take on what constitutes a good and/or bad end here, especially considering we know how actually bad things can get in this fic. I wonder if it isn't required to actually read the piece for the vote to count ..
8/10 ? Eh Yuuno, could have rated higher if you are going to "compliment" her
[Wayne's_world]
Acting on impulse, I reached forward and popped the top snap-buttons on Nanoha's shirt open, revealing her breast fully. "Definetlly a ten on the stroke-o-meter. SCHWING!"
[/Wayne's_world]
How's that work for you? I think Yuuno would have gotten that slap after all with that one XD Either that or his pizza might have gotten burned >.<b
I'd really prefer it if people read the story before they voted since their vote could be entirely off ( like how Haru is trying for N/F but is actually working away from it) But everyone is entitled to a vote. that means you too lurkers! Everyone can vote, so don't hold back. The point of an interactive story is to be interactive and hopefully make some people who don't post to come out from hidings and start talking more ^^
Right now I find myself awake at 3:30 AM with a headache and can't sleep. Going to try and write some or maybe scan some doujinshi.
SpaceBrotha
2008-01-11, 05:15
Right now I find myself awake at 3:30 AM with a headache and can't sleep. Going to try and write some or maybe scan some doujinshi.
Clearly you should have some of this stuff they gave me after they took off my tooth, seems to erase most bodily feelings that resemble pain in any way... :eyespin:
...and replace it with pure crack or something, i could probably write stuff that would make even the OC thread wince a couple of times :D
Edit: and mind you, they did have an instance where an OC character cured hayate's depression by tying her up and molesting her. just to mention one :)
Clearly you should have some of this stuff they gave me after they took off my tooth, seems to erase most bodily feelings that resemble pain in any way... :eyespin:
...and replace it with pure crack or something, i could probably write stuff that would make even the OC thread wince a couple of times :D
Edit: and mind you, they did have an instance where an OC character cured hayate's depression by tying her up and molesting her. just to mention one :)
How about we tie up Fate instead?
Nanoha smiled proudly. “You loved it.” She got a dark blush but no protest. “Fate-chan, do you trust me?”
Fate smiled softly at the request. “Yes, I trust you.” The look she got in return was priceless, melting her heart with the sheer cuteness and pride suddenly showing in her lover's eyes. “What did you have in mind?” She knew Nanoha liked to experiment in bed but always held back in an attempt to better please Fate's simple desires. Occasionally, like now, she would brave a request and ask permission to try something. Normally afterwards it became something they would do occasionally but for the most part their love-making was simple and romantic.
“Well,” Nanoha reached into the plastic bag and rooted around a moment before pulling out furry handcuffs. “I kind of...”
Fate's eyes went wide. “...Wow...”
“...Is it okay?”
Slowly nodding, Fate offered Nanoha her left wrist. “Mm... I trust you.” The blue eyed one smiled lovingly, gently taking Fate's wrist and clicking it within the restraint before putting the other half to their headboard. Shortly after her right wrist followed suit, leaving her bound shyly. “This is kind of...exciting...” Her wrist moved testingly, finding that she was, indeed, cuffed with her hands spread out above her head and attached to their bed frame.
Nanoha reached back into the bag. “One more thing...” She took out a blindfold that had the same fur around it as the handcuffs did. “You're not going to see any of this.” After the initial shock her lover gave a small lopsided grin and lifted up to allow Nanoha to place it on. “Is it okay? Uncomfortable? Are the cuffs too tight?”
“No, they're fine.” Fate felt her cheeks still coloring, suddenly wishing she could see Nanoha's gaze on her current position.
But since the cake is still a lie, this piece will still go un released *halo*
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On that note, I'm going to start writing on my fics now ^^;
Fast Lyrical Days. Sorry it's not too long but I want to start on SbTB as well tonight.
I was never really one to shop for girls but Nanoha's comment this morning was still bothering me. I knew she was just teasing but there was still something in the way she said it, some faint hint of sadness, that I couldn't help but pick up on. This thought ran over in my mind again and again as I looked at what was before me. Nothing caught my eye right away and I almost gave up on the store before finding something that looked promising. The glass jewelry cases in the middle of the store grabbed my attention, or rather a bracelet inside of it did. A medium sized linked silver bracelet was sparkling in the light almost as if calling out to me. On it was one matching silver charm in the shape of a heart.
'A charm bracelet,' I realized, looking at the several types of charms that could be added to it. 'Simple, pretty, shiny, and it just screams Nanoha.' I stood up straight and met the clerk's eye to call them over to me and ten minutes later I was back out in the cold, now fifty dollars lighter. Although the blow to my wallet stung, I was rather pleased with my purchase. Nanoha was always there for me, it was about time I showed my appreciation.
“I'm home!” I called out as always when I opened the door to the house I now shared with two girls.
Nanoha, as always, came to me with a smile. “Welcome home. You hungry?”
“Starving.” My reply seemed to make her happy. “Something smells good.”
“Pizza,” The girl informed me while rocking on her heels while waiting on me to finish taking off my shoes. “How was Hayate-chan?”
“A lot better.” Walking in, I held up the bag so she could see it. “I have something for you.”
“Oh?” Her face lit with curiosity. “What is it?”
“It's a box.” I took out the long slender jewelry case and held back a chuckle at Nanoha's reaction to cover her mouth in surprise. “Sure are happy about a box.”
“What's in it?” She reached for it and pouted when I moved it away. Trying again, she stood on her tip toes and reached for the case when I held it up. “Stop teasing me!”
“But it's fun.” I let her try once again before bringing it down and handing it to her. “Here, I hope you like.”
“I will,” She assured me before happily clicking open the case and fawning over the simple gift. “Awwwww, it's so kyute!”
“...Did you just say 'kyute'?”
“What on Earth made you buy me a gift?” She sounded happier than I've heard her in the past month or so. “Aw, I love it. A little heart and everything.” The bracelet was put on and looked at again now that it was on her wrist. “Thank you!” I got a tight hug, which I returned.
“I just thought I'd get it for you. No reason really.”
“You're the best.” To my surprise Nanoha got on her tiptoes and pecked my cheek. “Thanks a lot.”
“Welcome.” I touched the spot I was kissed and felt my lips turn up lightly to a smile. “You haven't kissed me in ages.”
“Well, if you would do things to warrant it, I'd kiss you more often.” She had a faint tint of blush on her cheeks, keeping her eyes on the sparking bracelet still. She stared at it for a moment longer before suddenly gasping out. “The pizza!” Quickly she ran to the kitchen and pulled the oven door open, quickly taking out the food. “Oh thank goodness, it's just a little brown on top.” Sliding it onto a cutting board, she went to dust her peel with corn starch before slipping the next one onto it. “Yuuno-kun, this one is yours. It'll take about six minutes so get comfortable and I'll bring it to you when it's done okay?”
“Hmmm....” I hopped on the kitchen counter instead and watched her. “It's quiet tonight, where's Fate at?”
“She ate dinner and conked out. Said she had a hard day.” The girl closed the oven door and walked over to me. Turning around, she faced the same way I was and leaned back against me, pulling my arms to wrap around her front. “It's a little chilly in here.”
“Put on clothes.” I teased. The girl was in her pajamas, which consisted of nothing more than a large shirt that went to her knees.
“But this is comfortable.” She protested while playing with my hands, eyes still darting to the gift she was wearing. “And you're warm.”
“Keep moving my hands like that and I'll end up feeling you up.”
“I don't mind,” She replied airily. “Go for it.”
“...I really will if you say that.”
“Then do it.”
“...I'm not in the mood.”
“Sure,” She giggled to herself and I couldn't help but chuckle. “Ne, question?”
“Yes?”
Nanoha looked over her shoulder at me. “Am I feminine?”
“What do you mean?” I blinked. “Such a sudden question.”
“Hm. Well,” She thought about it. “I kind of get love letters every now and then, but they are normally from people I don't even know. I have a fanclub you know?”
“I know.” I hated those guys. A group of about fifteen that basically worshiped the ground Nanoha walked on.
“But besides those, I don't really get any attention. Am I not feminine enough? Am I attractive?” I pondered it, allowing her to turn around in my arms and look at me. “Even you don't ever look at me when you have the chance.”
“I look at you all the time.”
“Not when I'm naked.”
I blinked. “You want me to look at you naked?”
“No!” She shook her head. “I mean when the situation comes up, when I walk across the hall in only a towel or something. Your eyes never once dropped to look. Am I not feminine?”
Acting on impulse, I reached forward and popped the top snap-buttons on Nanoha's shirt open, revealing her breast fully. “Hmmm.... I give you about an eight.”
Her face slowly turned scarlet but stood there a full five seconds before letting out a 'kya!' and turning around to button them. “Pervert!”
“Yup. I get that way around very feminine women.”
Nanoha slowed down her buttoning and looked back over at me, smiling. “I'll forgive you this time.”
“Thank you,” I teased back.
“But next time,” She winked. “I might just slap you.”
“You want a next time?”
“Maybe, nyaha!” With that she went over to the oven and checked my food. I didn't understand girls sometimes, but right now I could tell Nanoha was happy. She really wanted attention and a little encouragement that she was pretty. I had given her both tonight and her smile was really cute right now. It was this simple moment that made me glad we shared a house together.
~**~
Sunday again; a day off with nothing to do. From the burning smell of death coming from my door I could tell Fate was trying to make breakfast. After a glance out my window I saw Nanoha outside playing in the snow. I knew already that Hayate was going to be shopping today so she could get out of the house. As for me...
A.) Nanoha was so happy last night, I really should treat her to something today to make sure she knows that I appreciate her.
B.) I did say I would take Fate out sometime... but since I bought a gift, it will be a cheap date, would she even like that?
C.) I can probably meet up with Hayate for lunch, if I don't die from Fate's breakfast. A good meal sounds good.
An 8? Whats it out of? 100? :p
Hahah, well that was interesting, although he so should have be slapped :D
A is my vote. Let's see how far this goes. If it does infact go anywhere.
Right now I find myself awake at 3:30 AM with a headache and can't sleep. Going to try and write some or maybe scan some doujinshi.
Hope you get some sleep soon. You're not working tomorrow are you? That would be bad..
Clearly you should have some of this stuff they gave me after they took off my tooth, seems to erase most bodily feelings that resemble pain in any way... :eyespin:
...and replace it with pure crack or something, i could probably write stuff that would make even the OC thread wince a couple of times :D
Edit: and mind you, they did have an instance where an OC character cured hayate's depression by tying her up and molesting her. just to mention one :)
:dots: Hey don't point the finger at all of us........... Look to the guy who is the Hayate worshipper...
When I start writing the proper story to my OC's I'll post it here if anyone wants to read it. It'll make sense I promise :p
Hope you get some sleep soon. You're not working tomorrow are you? That would be bad..
When I start writing the proper story to my OC's I'll post it here if anyone wants to read it. It'll make sense I promise :p
Yup, leaving for work in...three hours.
And when you get any of your stories together, let me know and I'll add you to the archive and link them all so people will have an easier time reading and finding them ^^
Edit: @Eagle-chan: I changed your profile in archive, how does it look? I think I'll go with that if people think it's neater :)
Ow, ow. Sore arm sore arm... *cough*
So I finished the 2nd chapter of School of Lyrical. It is officially my longest piece of writing ever for a chapter at 2,364 words.
Enjoy it please? ^^;
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4000626/2/School_of_Lyrical
So you've placed a rude, smoking, tomboyish girl in Fate's house? Although it does seem she can be nice if she feels like it. Hmm, I wonder how much Yuuno/Nanoha/Fate triangle drama we'll get.
Ignis Fatuus (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3967522/1/Ignis_Fatuus)
Genre: Drama/Romance
Main couple: Fate, Nanoha
Summary: If things were not what they seem to be. An illusion. A misleading truth. Is there even a truth? AU fiction. FateNanoha.
Rating:T
Comatose induced memories? Funny, I've been playing with that idea recently as well. :D Now, curiosity is one of my weak points, and I'm dying to know just what happened in Nanoha's memories.
(Keroko please let me know what to add on yours)
Will do.
On that note, I'm going to start writing on my fics now ^^;
Fast Lyrical Days. Sorry it's not too long but I want to start on SbTB as well tonight.
I was never really one to shop for girls but Nanoha's comment this morning was still bothering me. I knew she was just teasing but there was still something in the way she said it, some faint hint of sadness, that I couldn't help but pick up on. This thought ran over in my mind again and again as I looked at what was before me. Nothing caught my eye right away and I almost gave up on the store before finding something that looked promising. The glass jewelry cases in the middle of the store grabbed my attention, or rather a bracelet inside of it did. A medium sized linked silver bracelet was sparkling in the light almost as if calling out to me. On it was one matching silver charm in the shape of a heart.
'A charm bracelet,' I realized, looking at the several types of charms that could be added to it. 'Simple, pretty, shiny, and it just screams Nanoha.' I stood up straight and met the clerk's eye to call them over to me and ten minutes later I was back out in the cold, now fifty dollars lighter. Although the blow to my wallet stung, I was rather pleased with my purchase. Nanoha was always there for me, it was about time I showed my appreciation.
“I'm home!” I called out as always when I opened the door to the house I now shared with two girls.
Nanoha, as always, came to me with a smile. “Welcome home. You hungry?”
“Starving.” My reply seemed to make her happy. “Something smells good.”
“Pizza,” The girl informed me while rocking on her heels while waiting on me to finish taking off my shoes. “How was Hayate-chan?”
“A lot better.” Walking in, I held up the bag so she could see it. “I have something for you.”
“Oh?” Her face lit with curiosity. “What is it?”
“It's a box.” I took out the long slender jewelry case and held back a chuckle at Nanoha's reaction to cover her mouth in surprise. “Sure are happy about a box.”
“What's in it?” She reached for it and pouted when I moved it away. Trying again, she stood on her tip toes and reached for the case when I held it up. “Stop teasing me!”
“But it's fun.” I let her try once again before bringing it down and handing it to her. “Here, I hope you like.”
“I will,” She assured me before happily clicking open the case and fawning over the simple gift. “Awwwww, it's so kyute!”
“...Did you just say 'kyute'?”
“What on Earth made you buy me a gift?” She sounded happier than I've heard her in the past month or so. “Aw, I love it. A little heart and everything.” The bracelet was put on and looked at again now that it was on her wrist. “Thank you!” I got a tight hug, which I returned.
“I just thought I'd get it for you. No reason really.”
“You're the best.” To my surprise Nanoha got on her tiptoes and pecked my cheek. “Thanks a lot.”
“Welcome.” I touched the spot I was kissed and felt my lips turn up lightly to a smile. “You haven't kissed me in ages.”
“Well, if you would do things to warrant it, I'd kiss you more often.” She had a faint tint of blush on her cheeks, keeping her eyes on the sparking bracelet still. She stared at it for a moment longer before suddenly gasping out. “The pizza!” Quickly she ran to the kitchen and pulled the oven door open, quickly taking out the food. “Oh thank goodness, it's just a little brown on top.” Sliding it onto a cutting board, she went to dust her peel with corn starch before slipping the next one onto it. “Yuuno-kun, this one is yours. It'll take about six minutes so get comfortable and I'll bring it to you when it's done okay?”
“Hmmm....” I hopped on the kitchen counter instead and watched her. “It's quiet tonight, where's Fate at?”
“She ate dinner and conked out. Said she had a hard day.” The girl closed the oven door and walked over to me. Turning around, she faced the same way I was and leaned back against me, pulling my arms to wrap around her front. “It's a little chilly in here.”
“Put on clothes.” I teased. The girl was in her pajamas, which consisted of nothing more than a large shirt that went to her knees.
“But this is comfortable.” She protested while playing with my hands, eyes still darting to the gift she was wearing. “And you're warm.”
“Keep moving my hands like that and I'll end up feeling you up.”
“I don't mind,” She replied airily. “Go for it.”
“...I really will if you say that.”
“Then do it.”
“...I'm not in the mood.”
“Sure,” She giggled to herself and I couldn't help but chuckle. “Ne, question?”
“Yes?”
Nanoha looked over her shoulder at me. “Am I feminine?”
“What do you mean?” I blinked. “Such a sudden question.”
“Hm. Well,” She thought about it. “I kind of get love letters every now and then, but they are normally from people I don't even know. I have a fanclub you know?”
“I know.” I hated those guys. A group of about fifteen that basically worshiped the ground Nanoha walked on.
“But besides those, I don't really get any attention. Am I not feminine enough? Am I attractive?” I pondered it, allowing her to turn around in my arms and look at me. “Even you don't ever look at me when you have the chance.”
“I look at you all the time.”
“Not when I'm naked.”
I blinked. “You want me to look at you naked?”
“No!” She shook her head. “I mean when the situation comes up, when I walk across the hall in only a towel or something. Your eyes never once dropped to look. Am I not feminine?”
Acting on impulse, I reached forward and popped the top snap-buttons on Nanoha's shirt open, revealing her breast fully. “Hmmm.... I give you about an eight.”
Her face slowly turned scarlet but stood there a full five seconds before letting out a 'kya!' and turning around to button them. “Pervert!”
“Yup. I get that way around very feminine women.”
Nanoha slowed down her buttoning and looked back over at me, smiling. “I'll forgive you this time.”
“Thank you,” I teased back.
“But next time,” She winked. “I might just slap you.”
“You want a next time?”
“Maybe, nyaha!” With that she went over to the oven and checked my food. I didn't understand girls sometimes, but right now I could tell Nanoha was happy. She really wanted attention and a little encouragement that she was pretty. I had given her both tonight and her smile was really cute right now. It was this simple moment that made me glad we shared a house together.
~**~
Sunday again; a day off with nothing to do. From the burning smell of death coming from my door I could tell Fate was trying to make breakfast. After a glance out my window I saw Nanoha outside playing in the snow. I knew already that Hayate was going to be shopping today so she could get out of the house. As for me...
A.) Nanoha was so happy last night, I really should treat her to something today to make sure she knows that I appreciate her.
B.) I did say I would take Fate out sometime... but since I bought a gift, it will be a cheap date, would she even like that?
C.) I can probably meet up with Hayate for lunch, if I don't die from Fate's breakfast. A good meal sounds good.
Blunt Yuuno is blunt. :D
Now, for options. With Nanoha saved, I'm leaning between B or C... however, Yuuno did promise he'd take Fate out one of these days... gotta stick to you words Yuuno. B
I'm not reading it since it can have a bad end (Fate or Nanoha X someone else), but I'll read it if we get the good NanoFate end, that's why I'm checking the alternatives and choosing the ones that I think will lead to the desired final, since you are not going to tell me directly what I must choose for that route.
*scratches head* You know... not to sound rude, but could you at least try to read the chapters you're voting for? It just seems... odd to me that you can vote without even having read the story.
Clearly you should have some of this stuff they gave me after they took off my tooth, seems to erase most bodily feelings that resemble pain in any way... :eyespin:
...and replace it with pure crack or something, i could probably write stuff that would make even the OC thread wince a couple of times :D
I dunno, after close to a year of Kha-crack, there's little that can make me wince.
Edit: and mind you, they did have an instance where an OC character cured hayate's depression by tying her up and molesting her. just to mention one :)
That's an exageration. :p
How about we tie up Fate instead?
Nanoha smiled proudly. “You loved it.” She got a dark blush but no protest. “Fate-chan, do you trust me?”
Fate smiled softly at the request. “Yes, I trust you.” The look she got in return was priceless, melting her heart with the sheer cuteness and pride suddenly showing in her lover's eyes. “What did you have in mind?” She knew Nanoha liked to experiment in bed but always held back in an attempt to better please Fate's simple desires. Occasionally, like now, she would brave a request and ask permission to try something. Normally afterwards it became something they would do occasionally but for the most part their love-making was simple and romantic.
“Well,” Nanoha reached into the plastic bag and rooted around a moment before pulling out furry handcuffs. “I kind of...”
Fate's eyes went wide. “...Wow...”
“...Is it okay?”
Slowly nodding, Fate offered Nanoha her left wrist. “Mm... I trust you.” The blue eyed one smiled lovingly, gently taking Fate's wrist and clicking it within the restraint before putting the other half to their headboard. Shortly after her right wrist followed suit, leaving her bound shyly. “This is kind of...exciting...” Her wrist moved testingly, finding that she was, indeed, cuffed with her hands spread out above her head and attached to their bed frame.
Nanoha reached back into the bag. “One more thing...” She took out a blindfold that had the same fur around it as the handcuffs did. “You're not going to see any of this.” After the initial shock her lover gave a small lopsided grin and lifted up to allow Nanoha to place it on. “Is it okay? Uncomfortable? Are the cuffs too tight?”
“No, they're fine.” Fate felt her cheeks still coloring, suddenly wishing she could see Nanoha's gaze on her current position.
But since the cake is still a lie, this piece will still go un released *halo*
And what if I told you there is a way to get to the cake?
When I start writing the proper story to my OC's I'll post it here if anyone wants to read it. It'll make sense I promise :p
Well, you can do what I'm doing to Fall of an Empire and change it a bit. The original draft only had Vivio as a CC, as the Wolkies were part of Nighty's Saga of Saga, but to make the fanfiction version easier to read (it's usually more fun fo most people to read fanfiction about CC's then OC's), I'm introducing them to this version.
Sam the Onion
2008-01-11, 09:09
Lyrical Days
Lovely chapter :D
Was Nanoha acting slow on purpose or just was so shocked it took her brains 5s to process the upcoming information? Great moment.
As for the choice, I'm feeling that Fate is in need for attention so B it is for this time even that something is bound to fail with this equal attention sharing.
School of Lyrical
I can't wait to read more of this but Rune better not touch Fate again :frustrated:. I feel bad for her about losing her first kiss drunk :upset:
I'd really prefer it if people read the story before they voted since their vote could be entirely off ( like how Haru is trying for N/F but is actually working away from it) But everyone is entitled to a vote.
Mh....
I don’t want to end up crying out of frustration again at one of your “destroy the happy family fandom” fics, so it would be better if I don’t waste my time and only read it when I’m sure that is NanoFate and not… something else.
I have asked you which is the option that will guide the story to our good final, and you haven’t told us, so it is not my fault if my option is not making the fic’s way towards the desired end, since the succession of events depends more in your mood than in the voted option, because if you want to direct the plot to a specific path you can easily do it in a world with unlimited possibilities like this one, independently of if you’re “forced” to write something specific due to the selection of certain option. Because of this reading the “fic” will not help me to lead the fic where we want, since we can’t know what you are thinking for the plot and if effectively there are possibilities for that good end.
Saludos, Haru
Mh....
I don’t want to end up crying out of frustration again at one of your “destroy the happy family fandom” fics, so it would be better if I don’t waste my time and only read it when I’m sure that is NanoFate and not… something else.
I have asked you which is the option that will guide the story to our good final, and you haven’t told us, so it is not my fault if my option is not making the fic’s way towards the desired end, since the succession of events depends more in your mood than in the voted option, because if you want to direct the plot to a specific path you can easily do it in a world with unlimited possibilities like this one, independently of if you’re “forced” to write something specific due to the selection of certain option. Because of this reading the “fic” will not help me to lead the fic where we want, since we can’t know what you are thinking for the plot and if effectively there are possibilities for that good end.
Saludos, Haru
Well, I can't really tell you how to get the ending you want. you'll just have to hope everyone votes that way.
And no, I'll never guide the story the way I want. This is to be interactive with everyone and everyone's vote is what counts. If I wanted to do my own story, I'd just simply do it XD (that's why I'm doing three fics at the same time hehe)
the best I can say is, yes, N/F is available. No, I don't mind if it goes there. But yes, Yuuno is the main character and thus his relationship is the foreground- so other relationships would be hard to get.
Sam the Onion
2008-01-11, 11:23
But yes, Yuuno is the main character and thus his relationship is the foreground- so other relationships would be hard to get.
Did this also count the ErioxCaro that was suppose to be possible or was that an exception to the 'Everybody digs Yuuno'?
Eagle8819
2008-01-11, 11:27
Edit: @Eagle-chan: I changed your profile in archive, how does it look? I think I'll go with that if people think it's neater :)
Looks okay to me. Let's see what others think. ;)
But, uh, side note... summary =/= summery. :heh:
As for Lyrical Days, I have to say the premise is...interesting. Somewhat. O_o Since I didn't read previous parts, though, I think I'm just going to see how this unfolds.
Comatose induced memories? Funny, I've been playing with that idea recently as well. :D Now, curiosity is one of my weak points, and I'm dying to know just what happened in Nanoha's memories.
I'm grinning. I'm grinning reaaaaaal wide now. ^____________^
Well, I'm just going to say, think outside the box. Or rather, don't think too far...the answer might just be under your nose. =P Any particular questions you may have? Though, of course, whether I may answer it or not is an entirely different question...
That aside, I'm not much of a fic reviewer but...sometimes I either say too little or too much, which plays a hand in lack of commenting. So here goes my question to previous fic posters: Is there anything in particular you would like thoughts on?
Mh....
I don’t want to end up crying out of frustration again at one of your “destroy the happy family fandom” fics, so it would be better if I don’t waste my time and only read it when I’m sure that is NanoFate and not… something else.
I have asked you which is the option that will guide the story to our good final, and you haven’t told us, so it is not my fault if my option is not making the fic’s way towards the desired end, since the succession of events depends more in your mood than in the voted option, because if you want to direct the plot to a specific path you can easily do it in a world with unlimited possibilities like this one, independently of if you’re “forced” to write something specific due to the selection of certain option. Because of this reading the “fic” will not help me to lead the fic where we want, since we can’t know what you are thinking for the plot and if effectively there are possibilities for that good end.
Saludos, Haru
I don't get what you mean exactly by saying "destroy the happy family fandom" fics but regardless of whether it's referring to the people who like NFV fics or by the inclusion of certain characters in a setting that would disable the image, that is a degrading remark you are throwing at the works of Satashi just because you don't want to waste your time reading something you don't like.
There's no clear option set for a single route since this is not how it works, that being fairly obvious by now, and asking for a answer regarding that serves no purpose since it might go in a completely different direction by the next decision point.
It's definitely not, as you put it, "forced", since the options were decided solely by the writer and each option thought out beyond the options alone and not after it was selected, with each and every scenario ready before the selection is done, as far as I understand by Satashi's explanation sometime back. The option that wins the most votes simply means it gets written, nothing including impulses after that.
It is evident that a fair number of people who participate in the voting as well like their NF fics but do not mistake to think that they will share your opinion of non-commital participation as well. If the ending turns out not to be your liking, all I can say is that it can be partially attributed to the single-minded pursuit which backfired in the end.
SpaceBrotha
2008-01-11, 11:51
That's an exageration. :p
He was doing an awfully convincing job right up to the kiss turned heatbutt
:p :D
If the ending turns out not to be your liking, all I can say is that it can be partially attributed to the single-minded pursuit which backfired in the end.
There's nothing single minded in the pursuits that are happening in the game atm... :p
first we went all around, then pursued fate, followed by hayate, people tried to wrench it over to vita but we instead went after nanoha for a sec and now it seems we're back on fate... :eyespin:
Deathkillz
2008-01-11, 11:55
archive post updated, please check if there are any mistakes in your section. If you are not added yet, please PM me with the information.
(Keroko please let me know what to add on yours)
On that note, I'm going to start writing on my fics now ^^;
Fast Lyrical Days. Sorry it's not too long but I want to start on SbTB as well tonight.
I was never really one to shop for girls but Nanoha's comment this morning was still bothering me. I knew she was just teasing but there was still something in the way she said it, some faint hint of sadness, that I couldn't help but pick up on. This thought ran over in my mind again and again as I looked at what was before me. Nothing caught my eye right away and I almost gave up on the store before finding something that looked promising. The glass jewelry cases in the middle of the store grabbed my attention, or rather a bracelet inside of it did. A medium sized linked silver bracelet was sparkling in the light almost as if calling out to me. On it was one matching silver charm in the shape of a heart.
'A charm bracelet,' I realized, looking at the several types of charms that could be added to it. 'Simple, pretty, shiny, and it just screams Nanoha.' I stood up straight and met the clerk's eye to call them over to me and ten minutes later I was back out in the cold, now fifty dollars lighter. Although the blow to my wallet stung, I was rather pleased with my purchase. Nanoha was always there for me, it was about time I showed my appreciation.
“I'm home!” I called out as always when I opened the door to the house I now shared with two girls.
Nanoha, as always, came to me with a smile. “Welcome home. You hungry?”
“Starving.” My reply seemed to make her happy. “Something smells good.”
“Pizza,” The girl informed me while rocking on her heels while waiting on me to finish taking off my shoes. “How was Hayate-chan?”
“A lot better.” Walking in, I held up the bag so she could see it. “I have something for you.”
“Oh?” Her face lit with curiosity. “What is it?”
“It's a box.” I took out the long slender jewelry case and held back a chuckle at Nanoha's reaction to cover her mouth in surprise. “Sure are happy about a box.”
“What's in it?” She reached for it and pouted when I moved it away. Trying again, she stood on her tip toes and reached for the case when I held it up. “Stop teasing me!”
“But it's fun.” I let her try once again before bringing it down and handing it to her. “Here, I hope you like.”
“I will,” She assured me before happily clicking open the case and fawning over the simple gift. “Awwwww, it's so kyute!”
“...Did you just say 'kyute'?”
“What on Earth made you buy me a gift?” She sounded happier than I've heard her in the past month or so. “Aw, I love it. A little heart and everything.” The bracelet was put on and looked at again now that it was on her wrist. “Thank you!” I got a tight hug, which I returned.
“I just thought I'd get it for you. No reason really.”
“You're the best.” To my surprise Nanoha got on her tiptoes and pecked my cheek. “Thanks a lot.”
“Welcome.” I touched the spot I was kissed and felt my lips turn up lightly to a smile. “You haven't kissed me in ages.”
“Well, if you would do things to warrant it, I'd kiss you more often.” She had a faint tint of blush on her cheeks, keeping her eyes on the sparking bracelet still. She stared at it for a moment longer before suddenly gasping out. “The pizza!” Quickly she ran to the kitchen and pulled the oven door open, quickly taking out the food. “Oh thank goodness, it's just a little brown on top.” Sliding it onto a cutting board, she went to dust her peel with corn starch before slipping the next one onto it. “Yuuno-kun, this one is yours. It'll take about six minutes so get comfortable and I'll bring it to you when it's done okay?”
“Hmmm....” I hopped on the kitchen counter instead and watched her. “It's quiet tonight, where's Fate at?”
“She ate dinner and conked out. Said she had a hard day.” The girl closed the oven door and walked over to me. Turning around, she faced the same way I was and leaned back against me, pulling my arms to wrap around her front. “It's a little chilly in here.”
“Put on clothes.” I teased. The girl was in her pajamas, which consisted of nothing more than a large shirt that went to her knees.
“But this is comfortable.” She protested while playing with my hands, eyes still darting to the gift she was wearing. “And you're warm.”
“Keep moving my hands like that and I'll end up feeling you up.”
“I don't mind,” She replied airily. “Go for it.”
“...I really will if you say that.”
“Then do it.”
“...I'm not in the mood.”
“Sure,” She giggled to herself and I couldn't help but chuckle. “Ne, question?”
“Yes?”
Nanoha looked over her shoulder at me. “Am I feminine?”
“What do you mean?” I blinked. “Such a sudden question.”
“Hm. Well,” She thought about it. “I kind of get love letters every now and then, but they are normally from people I don't even know. I have a fanclub you know?”
“I know.” I hated those guys. A group of about fifteen that basically worshiped the ground Nanoha walked on.
“But besides those, I don't really get any attention. Am I not feminine enough? Am I attractive?” I pondered it, allowing her to turn around in my arms and look at me. “Even you don't ever look at me when you have the chance.”
“I look at you all the time.”
“Not when I'm naked.”
I blinked. “You want me to look at you naked?”
“No!” She shook her head. “I mean when the situation comes up, when I walk across the hall in only a towel or something. Your eyes never once dropped to look. Am I not feminine?”
Acting on impulse, I reached forward and popped the top snap-buttons on Nanoha's shirt open, revealing her breast fully. “Hmmm.... I give you about an eight.”
Her face slowly turned scarlet but stood there a full five seconds before letting out a 'kya!' and turning around to button them. “Pervert!”
“Yup. I get that way around very feminine women.”
Nanoha slowed down her buttoning and looked back over at me, smiling. “I'll forgive you this time.”
“Thank you,” I teased back.
“But next time,” She winked. “I might just slap you.”
“You want a next time?”
“Maybe, nyaha!” With that she went over to the oven and checked my food. I didn't understand girls sometimes, but right now I could tell Nanoha was happy. She really wanted attention and a little encouragement that she was pretty. I had given her both tonight and her smile was really cute right now. It was this simple moment that made me glad we shared a house together.
~**~
Sunday again; a day off with nothing to do. From the burning smell of death coming from my door I could tell Fate was trying to make breakfast. After a glance out my window I saw Nanoha outside playing in the snow. I knew already that Hayate was going to be shopping today so she could get out of the house. As for me...
A.) Nanoha was so happy last night, I really should treat her to something today to make sure she knows that I appreciate her.
B.) I did say I would take Fate out sometime... but since I bought a gift, it will be a cheap date, would she even like that?
C.) I can probably meet up with Hayate for lunch, if I don't die from Fate's breakfast. A good meal sounds good.
Definitely not B...for obvious "hell no" reasons. That happy yaro is happy enough eating her breakfast.
Nanoha has interest in him but my vote goes to supporting hayate. Not that I like the idea of him being ungreatful for fate chan's gourmet but the alternative leads to a worse outcome :rolleyes:
*clicks C*
On a sidenote...wow you guys actually got the other thread locked...lol...
ghazghkull
2008-01-11, 12:19
My vote is B
On a sidenote...wow you guys actually got the other thread locked...lol...
Well things got out of hand, as you could probably tell.
krisslanza
2008-01-11, 12:21
So you've placed a rude, smoking, tomboyish girl in Fate's house? Although it does seem she can be nice if she feels like it. Hmm, I wonder how much Yuuno/Nanoha/Fate triangle drama we'll get.
I guess that about sums Rune up. Admit it, you love her. :D :heh: I wanted to try a totally new kind of character concept. Most of my OCs tend to be rather... Similar. I always tinkered with a character that smokes, but since I usually write in a sort of fantasy setting it kind of doesn't fit. Plus I haven't ever done a tomboy before (I pondered one, but she ended up altered in the end), I'm pleased with how I've made her turn out. Much better then the original concept (A bitchy but tsundere-type character).
I'm attempting to get quite a bit myself... This might be maybe about... 6 chapters long? Maybe more. I'd think at most 10 chapters. Really I have a journal with 200 pages in it. I have a lot of time to think and I don't want it to feel rushed... The only limitation is how far I can keep it going. I have a lot of things in mind... And I'll attempt some dramaz for once rather then some straight-forward fluff. This is indeed new ground for me here. :nod:
School of Lyrical
I can't wait to read more of this but Rune better not touch Fate again :frustrated:. I feel bad for her about losing her first kiss drunk :upset:
:D I was kind of waiting for someone to get that reaction there... It pleases me when I get the reaction I want from things. :heh:
I make no promises. Muhahahahahahaha. >3
EDIT:
Yay page-claim! I dedicate this page to NanoFate and cake.
If the ending turns out not to be your liking, all I can say is that it can be partially attributed to the single-minded pursuit which backfired in the end.
If it doesn't end as we wanted the fault won't be of the people who voted; you said it by yourself: "There's no clear option set for a single route", so from this point of view we are voting and choosing the routes completely as random, because even if the author has each scenario ready before the selection is done, we don’t know what it will be; furthermore from a probabilistic point of view our single vote would be irrelevant due to the uncertainly principle (direct translation form Spanish, I don’t know it’s called in English). That way we’re not “choosing our own path” as the game proclaims, we’re only waiting to see what the author will write based on the most voted option and in her own scenario planned by forehand.
Saludos, Haru
ghazghkull
2008-01-11, 12:35
If it doesn't end as we wanted the fault won't be of the people who voted; you said it by yourself: "There's no clear option set for a single route", so from this point of view we are voting and choosing the routes completely as random, because even if the author has each scenario ready before the selection is done, we don’t know what it will be; furthermore from a probabilistic point of view our single vote would be irrelevant due to the uncertainly principle (direct translation form Spanish, I don’t know it’s called in English). That way we’re not “choosing our own path” as the game proclaims, we’re only waiting to see what the author will write based on the most voted option and in her own scenario planned by forehand.
Saludos, Haru
I believe Satashi even said that each choice only has a general outline. With that in mind, it is possible that each route only has a set guideline as so Satashi has an idea of what to write, and then tailors it a bit to meet the expectations of those who voted.
Although yes a dating sim usually has a preset storyline and can only have so many alternatives since each answer is scripted, this is a fanfic dating sim, therefore this adds that flair that it can at least turn out somewhat like how we wanted.
Am I making any sense here? :twitch:
Sam the Onion
2008-01-11, 12:46
If it doesn't end as we wanted the fault won't be of the people who voted; you said it by yourself: "There's no clear option set for a single route", so from this point of view we are voting and choosing the routes completely as random, because even if the author has each scenario ready before the selection is done, we don’t know what it will be; furthermore from a probabilistic point of view our single vote would be irrelevant due to the uncertainly principle (direct translation form Spanish, I don’t know it’s called in English). That way we’re not “choosing our own path” as the game proclaims, we’re only waiting to see what the author will write based on the most voted option and in her own scenario planned by forehand.
Saludos, Haru
Actually I think that Lyrical Days has the most clearest choices of all 'games'. (Not that it would be a bad thing)
A) Fate
B) Nanoha
C) Hayate
D) None of the above
Only vague choices were the Fate's confession scene, which is still somewhat unclear, or what route to take home choices.
Sure the famed NxF route isn't as linear but that's just a dessert. Yuuno is the 'player', so choosing for other characters would be just dumb.
Thing is that this game is played by many people simotaneously and only one choice can be taken at the time, otherwise it would start pyramid effect that every choice would spread into two or more scenarios, which would end up in a fairly good game script but you would get updated to 'your' route once a week or so. And besides, you don't really know what happens in 'real' games either as they, too, have been created in someone's head and can be just as or more vague and unpredictable as Lyrical Days. Only difference is that they have save option for screw ups.
@krisslanza
Argh... The teasing :eyespin:
krisslanza
2008-01-11, 12:56
In best case scenario the teasing will end on Monday when I get chapter 3 out :heh:
It'll probably be rather lengthy since it has to cover that first "date" and some other stuff. :eyespin:
I better make sure I have enough pencil lead to write it all out. It'd be a lot easier if I had a desk in my room. I write everything laying down on my bed, it gets really annoying near the end of the page.
But I have many things planned. Many. Things planned that I think people may not expect I hope. :D
And of course then I still have my Arc-en-Ciel project... Which should be full of things none of you even imagined I'd be capable of. ^_^
Sam the Onion
2008-01-11, 13:10
In best case scenario the teasing will end on Monday when I get chapter 3 out :heh:
It'll probably be rather lengthy since it has to cover that first "date" and some other stuff. :eyespin:
If you're going to make 10 chapters, the third isn't going to relief me from my anxiety. :heh::uhoh:
I better make sure I have enough pencil lead to write it all out. It'd be a lot easier if I had a desk in my room. I write everything laying down on my bed, it gets really annoying near the end of the page.
I use my trusty OpenOffice for writing and roms for backup :p No pencil leads or paper wasted.
But I have many things planned. Many. Things planned that I think people may not expect I hope. :D
And of course then I still have my Arc-en-Ciel project... Which should be full of things none of you even imagined I'd be capable of. ^_^
I love suprises unless they abuse Fate or any other character dear to me :p
Did this also count the ErioxCaro that was suppose to be possible or was that an exception to the 'Everybody digs Yuuno'?
YEs, they were an option ^^
Voting last for another little while, so everyone can get over thier "omg is it safe to post and discuss/"Argue" again here? @_@"
Tonight I'm going to work on SbtB and tryyyyyy to get it going to be posted.... which means I have to write 5k words tonight after work >< gonna be rough.
About Haru, he's always been like that :) If he reads to vote or not is up to him, I just want to make sure everyone has an opinion. If that's his view, I respect it. Although I wish he WOULD read before voting, I won't not count his ( just pelase don't tell me you're not reading ><) the point of this story is to get everyone here together and have a chance to guide a fic as a group. :)
Actually I think that Lyrical Days has the most clearest choices of all 'games'. (Not that it would be a bad thing)
A) Fate
B) Nanoha
C) Hayate
D) None of the above
Actually, it's deeper than that. Choices being made are more clear right now ( because I'm working on two fics, it's hard to be as vauge) but for the most part, the people who see "this choice leads no where" are the ones missing out.
Example: Elio died because no one wanted to just "walk around town, because nothing will happen there" and also "Not buying a present will lead to a wasted choice", but in reality, walking around town would have kept Elio alive, and NOT buying a present would lead to a more expensive date that would yield a better end result.
So yes, it looks simple on the outside, but there are things I know that you don't. Keep that in mind :P
I believe Satashi even said that each choice only has a general outline. With that in mind, it is possible that each route only has a set guideline as so Satashi has an idea of what to write, and then tailors it a bit to meet the expectations of those who voted.
Yeah, I only know each girl's storyline. weither hey live long enough to get there, like Yuuno enough to get there, ect, relies on you. Right now each girl likes Yuuno enough to date him. To go farther than that is up to you guys.
If it doesn't end as we wanted the fault won't be of the people who voted; you said it by yourself: "There's no clear option set for a single route", so from this point of view we are voting and choosing the routes completely as random, because even if the author has each scenario ready before the selection is done, we don’t know what it will be; furthermore from a probabilistic point of view our single vote would be irrelevant due to the uncertainly principle (direct translation form Spanish, I don’t know it’s called in English). That way we’re not “choosing our own path” as the game proclaims, we’re only waiting to see what the author will write based on the most voted option and in her own scenario planned by forehand.
Wrong :p Each girl has an affection meter that goes up. each point opens more scenerios. Right now Fate is close to 'making love' point. Hayate crossed the 'date' point, and my favourite girl, Nanoha, just now got to the point where she is open to liking Yuuno. That being said, this story isn't going down the path I myself would choose. It's all you guys 100%
krisslanza
2008-01-11, 13:22
Trust me I'd LOVE to use a computer to do this but I don't own a laptop and my computer is still locked up in a storage shed until I have good grades :uhoh: So I have to settle for pencil and a journal.
Then it'll be a mixed basket of surprises. :P
Have you seen the Arc-en-Ciel teaser written by my friend?
EDIT:
I think Satashi-sama just pwned everyone's minds with that example revelation. :P
ghazghkull
2008-01-11, 13:23
I love suprises unless they abuse Fate or any other character dear to me :p
Hmm....Abuse....:thinker:!!
I have an idea! :naughty::heh::D
Nanoha and Fate in an abusive relationship with their husbands (not Yuuno and Chrono mind you since they're still cool in my book) and meet each other at some point through said boys, and start an affair of some sorts ;)
What you think? Think that could possibly be pulled off well?
Hmm....Abuse....:thinker:!!
I have an idea! :naughty::heh::D
Nanoha and Fate in an abusive relationship with their husbands (not Yuuno and Chrono mind you since they're still cool in my book) and meet each other at some point through said boys, and start an affair of some sorts ;)
What you think? Think that could possibly be pulled off well?
I don't think they'd cheat on their husbands....... but then again I don't think they'd take abuse..... It's be challenging and an interesting read to say the least. Go for it :D
krisslanza
2008-01-11, 13:29
That is a interesting idea I'll say. Try it out! You won't know until you try, you know what I mean? I didn't think my idea would've turned out so well but it's turning out to be doing quite well.
ghazghkull
2008-01-11, 13:29
I don't think they'd cheat on their husbands....... but then again I don't think they'd take abuse..... It's be challenging and an interesting read to say the least. Go for it :D
Well if I can set up a good premise of how they even got into such situations, then it could work out ^^
I might come up with a draft or outline later when I'm off work. I'm just glad I have comp access here ^^
Sam the Onion
2008-01-11, 13:32
Hmm....Abuse....:thinker:!!
I have an idea! :naughty::heh::D
Nanoha and Fate in an abusive relationship with their husbands (not Yuuno and Chrono mind you since they're still cool in my book) and meet each other at some point through said boys, and start an affair of some sorts ;)
What you think? Think that could possibly be pulled off well?
Interesting idea and I think it could be done with success.
Quoting Satashi-sama's: Go for it
Example: Elio died because no one wanted to just "walk around town, because nothing will happen there"
Not knowing who you're going to meet is a major turnoff for most.
Well if I can set up a good premise of how they even got into such situations, then it could work out ^^
I might come up with a draft or outline later when I'm off work. I'm just glad I have comp access here ^^
If you get a draft going I'll take a look at it if you want
Interesting idea and I think it could be done with success.
Quoting Satashi-sama's: Go for it
Not knowing who you're going to meet is a major turnoff for most.
You have to take risk sometimes :D
Wrong :p Each girl has an affection meter that goes up.
Wrong? I know how that works, I have one of those for you too, but it goes down, not up :)
Hmm....Abuse....:thinker:!!
I have an idea! :naughty::heh::D
Nanoha and Fate in an abusive relationship with their husbands (not Yuuno and Chrono mind you since they're still cool in my book) and meet each other at some point through said boys, and start an affair of some sorts ;)
What you think? Think that could possibly be pulled off well?
If you ask me, I can’t see that plot happening with those characters, and for a NanoFate fic it doesn’t seems attractive to me, even if I read every NanoFate fic I would have my doubts about reading that one.
I’m more interested in your other fic, Road of Love, can I ask you if you’re planning to continue it?
Saludos, Haru
Wrong? I know how that works, I have one of those for you too, but it goes down, not up :)
That hurts T_T no more fics for joo
SpaceBrotha
2008-01-11, 14:08
That hurts T_T no more fics for joo
*pats satashi on the head* there there, it's just haru being haru... :bash:
Edit: :D okay, that looks like i'm patting satashi with a hammer, but i'll leave it for laughs :D
ghazghkull
2008-01-11, 14:09
If you get a draft going I'll take a look at it if you want
That would be great if you could. Mind you it's once I have time and I'm on break or something. Trying to get used to working in an office atm.
If you ask me, I can’t see that plot happening with those characters, and for a NanoFate fic it doesn’t seems attractive to me, even if I read every NanoFate fic I would have my doubts about reading that one.
I’m more interested in your other fic, Road of Love, can I ask you if you’re planning to continue it?
Saludos, Haru
If you don't want to read it, it's fine. It's just an idea at the moment, but hey this is a fanfic, and I can exercise a bit of poetic and creative licence to actually make it work out, without distorting the characters beyond who and what they are.
As for Road of Love, that depends if I can get the mood back, considering I'm still reeling from Satashi-sama's comments. (No offense intended Satashi-sama, but I need to get that out of my system otherwise I won't be able to write them out like how I want them to turn out).
But as soon as I can regain my muse on that particular story, I'll probably be back and at it.
As for Road of Love, that depends if I can get the mood back, considering I'm still reeling from Satashi-sama's comments. (No offense intended Satashi-sama, but I need to get that out of my system otherwise I won't be able to write them out like how I want them to turn out).
But as soon as I can regain my muse on that particular story, I'll probably be back and at it.
^^; I'm sorry, I guess they were a little harsh without meaning for them to be >< Please don't forget that it's just one person's opinion. writing comes from you, so go with what you want.
ghazghkull
2008-01-11, 15:21
^^; I'm sorry, I guess they were a little harsh without meaning for them to be >< Please don't forget that it's just one person's opinion. writing comes from you, so go with what you want.
As soon as I can get that back into my system and get over the shock, I'll probably be dolling it out again.
Fate able to play guitar is intended for a later part in my story ;)
P.S. SO CLOSE!!!! I WAS SO CLOSE TO CLAIM THE PAGE CLAIM LOL XD
krisslanza
2008-01-11, 15:59
My partner in crime recently made a Fanfiction.net account but is unable to upload anything until at least tomorrow (You know that thing you have to have an account 'x' old... Something like that) so I'm posting this on his behalf.
So I didn't write this. His Fanfiction.net penname is cannonballninja.
Beauty on the Pyre
An Arc-en-Ciel story
Chapter One
Riding on the Winds of Change
There was something unsettling about this woman. The way she simply sighed and stared; gazing out the great glass window into the starlit sky. Of course, her circumstances were far from enviable…but that didn’t mean she had to be a bitch about it. “More wine?” Erika offered with a cheerful smile – as best as she could manage. She was torn, really, between hating the Erika von Cale she knew for being reduced to mollycoddling their honoured guest and relishing the challenge of finding out what made her tick. Erika bit on her thumb, wide eyed in anticipation of such a simple answer. The pause was insufferably pregnant.
“No…thanks.” She spoke! Erika’s eye twitched ever so slightly. For once, the Inquisitor had met her apparent match. With practiced habit, she brushed her dusty blonde hair out of her eyes and made to relax. It was…well, it was hard. You could almost feel the power coursing from her – backed up by a confidence that simply oozed from every pore in her body. Even here, effectively a prisoner like this woman was, and surrounded by the most impressive security features known to the Emperor she remained undaunted.
To tell the honest truth, Erika did not feel entirely safe. Years of instinct were screaming at her to run or fight or something! Anything but sit here and sip expensive drinks (though, Erika mused, the red was particularly fine). She licked her lips and poured herself another glass, raising it to her mouth. Fate Testarossa…what a unique, talented, arrogant, prideful little minx she was. Erika smiled to herself. She hated her. But she had a job to do, and she was damn well going to do it.
Erika narrowed her bright blue eyes, sharp and angled features tensing imperceptibly. Wolfish was the word you’d use to describe her. A breeze from the wall vents wafted through the room and clawed at the edges of her hair; her bangs brushes against her shoulders, her fringe dancing shadows across her eyes. Fate turned and eyed her minder. The Ace stood and stretched; Erika bit down on her lip and forced her body to stay seated.
A second passed before the Inquisitor felt she could speak again. “So…” she started slowly “…look, I know this must be awkward but you should try to relax a little. Is there anything I can get you?” Erika leant back into the chair and extended her hands; offering hospitality if nothing else. The mage seemed to consider the offer and Erika couldn’t help but draw breath in anticipation. “A ticket home would be nice.” Erika nodded slowly. “Ah…well. When the war is over?” She made for a disarming shrug and smiled sheepishly on purpose. Fate turned towards the window again and folded her arms. In her mind, Erika felt the ice she was standing on crack beneath her feet.
The Inquisitor followed Fate’s gaze and decided to keep pushing. Rumour had it she was one of the best users of ‘magic’ the TSAB had: a mage par excellence. Even with her device in the vault it would be- “You know…” Fate cut Erika’s train of thought short “…I haven’t see anything remotely special since I go here. How do you do it?” She was rather taken aback. “Hm?” The mage swept a gesture across the room. “Just…everything. How do you keep going, and how has Varista managed to gain so much support in the middle of a war?” Erika tilted her head; she looked perplexed in a cute way. “Sheer bloody mindedness-“ “yes, you’re very stubborn” “-and I suppose we’re the lesser of two evils, really”
Fate glanced back. It looked like that last comment had been something of a surprise. “Pardon?” Her tone was colder than before. Erika answered carefully. “Well…call me biased, but I’d like to think we’re the good guys.” The words hung in the air like the smell of so much rotting meat. Erika picked some papers off the table in front of her, straightened them and stood...yes, it suddenly felt like staying seated was a bad idea. Fate glanced at the ground and nodded. “I can see your point.” Erika lowered the papers to her side and pushed the chair in.
“I’m sensing a ‘but’ there…?”
“You’ll forgive me if being what amounts to a prisoner colours my view somewhat.”
“It could be worse – at least the food’s nice and you’ve got a good room.”
“It could be better…”
“…True.”
“I’m sorry about this. I’m just…frustrated!"
Erika stepped over and put a hand on Fate’s shoulder. She sighed. “Don’t worry too much about it. I mean, really, I don’t think anyone would blame you with things as they are.” The Inquisitor let her eyes drift over her prisoner’s hair. She looked up and down at it. For a moment, there was a twinge of jealousy and admiration shivered down her spine. She touched it and ran a gentle finger down it for a second. “…you have very pretty hair.” And then the ice broke and Erika received a face full of elbow.
Papers scattered to the ground as Erika lurched back; her hand closing around the grip of the pistol at her side. She drew and Fate almost vanished. Nearly…as Erika’s mechanical eyes tracked Fate’s path and every enhanced fibre of her being spun around to meet the mage face to face she nearly made it. But not quite. Her arm was slammed down, a blast echoed in the small room as her gun melted a neat hole in the floor, and Erika felt herself wince as the last thing she saw clearly was a fist.
The Inquisitor’s face ricocheted gracefully off the table as her body flipped head over heels into the far wall. There was a rather sickening crunch and a concerned, if hesitant, voice cut in over an invisible intercom. “…Lady Cale?” A hand rose unsteadily into the air. The intercom went silent as Erika put her palm on the wall and clawed to her knees. She stood, slowly, leaving bloody fingerprints on the stark, unforgiving surface. She dabbed at her nose carefully before rubbing her jaw. “Ahhh…was that really necessary?” Fate kissed her knuckles and shook her head. “No, but it made me feel a bit better.”
Erika dusted off her uniform; watching Fate take her seat at the now dented table. The Inquisitor fished in her pockets and pulled out a kerchief as Fate moved to speak again. “You can’t use magic can you?” There was short silence as Erika cleaned herself up. “Not naturally, no. None of us can.” There was a shuffle as Fate put her arms across the table and frowned in thought. “…I didn’t think so.” The Inquisitor glanced back and the door opened. “Indeed. Anyway, if you’ll excuse me, I’d like to call it a day here. My face may need some fixing.” Fate covered a small smirk and coughed. “Of course.”
The door closed behind Erika with an electric clank. She slumped, heavily, against the opposite wall. Eyes closed, the Inquisitor took a moment to rub the bridge of her nose and ensure nothing was too broken. Footsteps? “…Erika? That was harsh in there. You look like you got hit with a freight train.” He was a handsome guy; tall, dark haired with pretty green eyes. She felt her heart flutter for a moment. Jonas spoke again. “No, don’t look at me with those eyes – we decided it wouldn’t work, remember? Now keep your head straight or I’ll touch something you don’t want me too.” Erika glanced away and pouted as the resident doctor let his expert touch check things out. “You’re fine, girl. Nothing worse than a lovely bruise will come out of the smack you took.” He backed off and wiped his hands down the front of his lab coat. “Tch…doesn’t mean it didn’t hurt. Still, good to hear it isn’t serious.”
Jonas turned to go, but Erika grabbed his hand. “…Jonas?” He turned back. “Look…no, Eri-” She kissed him, Just slightly on the lips, before stepping back. Jonas sighed. “I…I’m sorr-“ Erika winced as he tapped her nose. “You should be. We…we tried. I can’t be that sort of person.” She bit her lip slightly. “I know, Jon…I know.”
They both straightened up at the sound of armoured boots. Jonas stepped behind Erika as she moved to speak with the lead soldier. “Ah, lieutenant.” He snapped to attention and gave a nod to Erika and Jonas. “Lady Cale, Doctor Kraven. Just here to escort Miss Testarossa back to her room as usual. A shame to see what happened in there this time.” Erika waved him off. “It’s quite alright, lieutenant.” The soldier saluted again. “As you say, ma’am. Good to see you again, Doctor.” “Good to see you too, James.”With a second electric clank and the trio of soldiers disappeared through the door. “Anyway…” Jonas scratched the back of his head. “…I’d best be off. I’ll see you later.” They waved and he left.
Erika folded her arms and leant against the wall with a sigh. She paused to think. Well…that was awkward. The Inquisitor stretched and started to make her way down the white washed corridor; all polished white walls and silver mirrored floors. Looking down she caught her reflection walking beside; just through the looking glass. People saluted as she passed them, a pair of technicians was working on one of the camera eyes built into the ceiling, and the regiment’s banners ruffled quietly alongside their Imperial counterparts – all blues and blacks and golds. Erika turned down a side passageway and reached her room – the door beeping at her approach, sliding open to let her step through the threshold. She collapsed at her desk; commanding the door to close with a wave of her hand. The light faded as it slid shut, a retreating sliver – the room was left cast in darkness.
The desk lit up, bathing her face in a ghostly paleness as she connected to the humming machine. Data streamed across her HUD; she glanced left at a window only she could see and reached across the desk. Fingers ready to begin. Days ended with reports that needed to be written. Could she get away with a short one this time? Erika’s eyes glanced over to her single bed. Yeah…a short one. Just this once. And, with that, the Inquisitor began to type.
It'll be up on Fanfiction.net tomorrow. :nod:
ghazghkull
2008-01-11, 16:06
Let me say right now: The dialog is very awkward. I don't even know if it's Erika, or if it's Fate speaking.
If that's intensional, that's a really bad way to present it, because I can't make heads or tails.
It's an interesting premise, but the dialog makes it hard to follow.
krisslanza
2008-01-11, 16:21
Hmmm really? As a general rule of thumb when only two people are involved in speaking dialog generally goes in a alternating order, unless otherwise noted.
i.e.
"Blah" said A
"Blah" said B
"Blah"
"Blahblah"
It'd be assumed the 3rd is A responding to B and then the 4th is B responding to A. Of course if it had gone...
"Blah" said A
"Blah" said B
"Blah"
"Blahblah" Said A
You'd be noting 'A' spoke again before B did. Although usually then you'd just connect it... ("Blah" said A, "Blah")
Not to be like saying you did anything wrong or anything @.@; Just pointing that out if it helps any at all. You generally shouldn't need to note whom is speaking after every line of dialog unless multiple characters are involved.
ghazghkull
2008-01-11, 16:36
Yeah, but the thing is, the dialog between the two are messed into one paragraph, and that makes it incredibly hard to discern. That's my problem.
That's why it is common practice that every time a different person speaks, it's a new paragraph, like you've done.
But in the one you posted, I can't tell if it's Fate or Erika because their dialog is all in the same paragraph.
And here's a little something for you guys that you might enjoy ^^
If a person who is speaking a long length of dialog needs to break it off into a new paragraph, it is done as such:
"So and so says this and that and blah, blah blah.
"So and so continues to ramble on in a new paragraph, but notice how the initial paragraph doesn't cut off with a quotation mark, but this one does?"
That's just something a little extra I felt like throwing in, for those who have a huge problem of wondering how they can fit so much dialog without making it a big mess of a paragraph. ;)
As soon as I can get that back into my system and get over the shock, I'll probably be dolling it out again.
Fate able to play guitar is intended for a later part in my story ;)
P.S. SO CLOSE!!!! I WAS SO CLOSE TO CLAIM THE PAGE CLAIM LOL XD
Yeah, but the thing is, the dialog between the two are messed into one paragraph, and that makes it incredibly hard to discern. That's my problem.
That's why it is common practice that every time a different person speaks, it's a new paragraph, like you've done.
But in the one you posted, I can't tell if it's Fate or Erika because their dialog is all in the same paragraph.
And here's a little something for you guys that you might enjoy ^^
If a person who is speaking a long length of dialog needs to break it off into a new paragraph, it is done as such:
"So and so says this and that and blah, blah blah.
"So and so continues to ramble on in a new paragraph, but notice how the initial paragraph doesn't cut off with a quotation mark, but this one does?"
That's just something a little extra I felt like throwing in, for those who have a huge problem of wondering how they can fit so much dialog without making it a big mess of a paragraph. ;)
Guitar is fine, I just gave my opinon :P
Also what G-man said is true. I read a bit of the stoy and I was lost in the dialog. Two people speaking in same paragraph really made me lost it.
Example:
The Inquisitor followed Fate’s gaze and decided to keep pushing. Rumour had it she was one of the best users of ‘magic’ the TSAB had: a mage par excellence. Even with her device in the vault it would be- “You know…” Fate cut Erika’s train of thought short “…I haven’t see anything remotely special since I go here. How do you do it?” She was rather taken aback. “Hm?” The mage swept a gesture across the room. “Just…everything. How do you keep going, and how has Varista managed to gain so much support in the middle of a war?” Erika tilted her head; she looked perplexed in a cute way. “Sheer bloody mindedness-“ “yes, you’re very stubborn” “-and I suppose we’re the lesser of two evils, really”
Fate glanced back. It looked like that last comment had been something of a surprise. “Pardon?” Her tone was colder than before. Erika answered carefully. “Well…call me biased, but I’d like to think we’re the good guys.” The words hung in the air like the smell of so much rotting meat. Erika picked some papers off the table in front of her, straightened them and stood...yes, it suddenly felt like staying seated was a bad idea. Fate glanced at the ground and nodded. “I can see your point.” Erika lowered the papers to her side and pushed the chair in.
That really lost me. Best solution is to just make it different paragraphs then it's fine :3
krisslanza
2008-01-11, 17:21
I see, I see. I've passed along the comments (Though he lurks here anyway and would've noted them anyway) and he'll take them into consideration :heh:
Update on archives
Original Character writers now have a link to their character's profiles as well as a fanfiction.net profile
Began changing formatting for FF.N stories to make it look neater (Thanks Eagle)
ghazghkull
2008-01-11, 18:35
Well here's what I have so far for Road of Love, before I had decided to call it quits back then.
Please comment on what's provided.
Road of Love
Chapter IV
You simply looked at me strangely at that response. I suppose it couldn’t be helped, since I was a bit vague with it, but like you said, you wanted to figure it out yourself. And considering the way you looked at me, you just maybe needed a few nudges, and then there, you’ve found me.
We spent the next little while in relative silence.
At least I learned one thing: she’s opened to being a lesbian, but the actual relationship aspects was what she was shaky about. I could live with that. At least there’s hope.
The only problem would be how everyone outside our circle of friends would handle it, but I think she’s another bridge that’ll be crossed when we got to it. If all goes well, we’ll cross that bridge together. And I promise you Nanoha, I’ll be strong for you if all goes wrong.
We stayed here for quite a while, before you finally decided to call it in early, and the two of us headed home. We didn’t say much. That expression on your face was enough to tell me you had a lot on your mind now. Knowing you, you’re right now trying to figure me out. Although I wouldn’t be surprised if you figured it out today, I think it’ll take at least a week before you actually finally caught on.
Checking the time, I realized that I actually would have time to actually visit Erio before the day was over. Of course I’d walk you home first, Nanoha.
The next few days were okay. They weren’t what I had hoped, but at least they weren’t horrid.
Nanoha unfortunately had been a lot quieter than usual, but from the way only Suzuka and Arisa were concerned, I easily realized that you had turned to Hayate as well. She was everyone’s advisor, after all. I wouldn’t be too surprised if an Admiral one day came to her for advice.
At school, the rate of people asking you out had dropped quite a bit. I suppose with your present mood, it couldn’t be helped. But that did ease my heart quite a bit, considering how the last thing I really wanted was for people to bother you, especially like the way you were right now.
You still talked to us, but it was somewhat more reserved than it usually was, even for you. You’d put up a front, but it was easy to see through. All of us could see it, and I’m sure you’re aware of it. But you keep that front up, so that other people don’t bother you as much. At least that was a good thing, but sooner or later, you’re going to have to let it out. But then again, I guess it couldn’t be helped. I mean, I did drop quite a hint.
It was now Wednesday, and you were still out of it.
And instead of being there with you, I was now on the roof with Hayate.
“Looks like you took some of my advice and didn’t drop the bombshell on her.” That was the first thing she had to say?! But then again, it was just like Hayate to be direct and to the point.
“She came to me on Sunday,” she continued on. “Remember how I had said that she just needed that nudge? Well that was more like a push unfortunately. I don’t know what you did, nor do I want to know, but now she’s confused. I just want to warn you that she doesn’t understand what she’s feeling, and might turn to you for answers.”
“Me?!”
“You can’t expect to have made a leak and not answer to it,” she simply replied back. She made it sound like it was the most simplest of things. Give me a break here; it was nerve-racking as it was trying to get it done in the first place. But I guess it couldn’t be helped. I did say all that to Nanoha.
“Just be more careful with your words next time, Fate-chan,” she said sighed. “I don’t want to Nanoha to get hurt. And the last thing I need is you two to get into a disagreement. Besides, that would mean I could only have one of you two if I ever get that unit I was talking about.” I simply nodded.
“Anyways, enough with the gloom. The others are waiting for us.” Suddenly grabbing my hand, Hayate started to drag me all the day down. If it weren’t for school, she’d probably just call up Rein, and jump right off and fly down.
Even after talking to Hayate, you never said a thing to me throughout the rest of the week.
What in the world was going on? This was out of character, even for you. I just hope nothing’s wrong. Although it might’ve been a mistake on my part for making such an irrational decision like that and drop as many hints as I did.
Today, you were really out of character. You were extremely jumpy, as if you were nervous about something. Was there something wrong about what I had told you that had gotten you like this? Or was it something else? Because throughout the entire day, you prematurely said “No I’m not interesting in going to the dance” to nearly every question that came from a guy, some who were simply asking for homework problems. That was one of the greater issues.
Another was the fact you actually got up and left the classroom when we had changed for PE. By the time everyone else was heading out, you had returned fully changed, with your uniform in hand. That raised quite a few alarms in my mind. Was someone bullying you, or harassing you that I wasn’t aware of? You never had such reservations about changing in front of other females before, so why now?
Well here's what I have so far for Road of Love, before I had decided to call it quits back then.
Please comment on what's provided.
Road of Love
Chapter IV
You simply looked at me strangely at that response. I suppose it couldn’t be helped, since I was a bit vague with it, but like you said, you wanted to figure it out yourself. And considering the way you looked at me, you just maybe needed a few nudges, and then there, you’ve found me.
We spent the next little while in relative silence.
At least I learned one thing: she’s opened to being a lesbian, but the actual relationship aspects was what she was shaky about. I could live with that. At least there’s hope.
The only problem would be how everyone outside our circle of friends would handle it, but I think she’s another bridge that’ll be crossed when we got to it. If all goes well, we’ll cross that bridge together. And I promise you Nanoha, I’ll be strong for you if all goes wrong.
We stayed here for quite a while, before you finally decided to call it in early, and the two of us headed home. We didn’t say much. That expression on your face was enough to tell me you had a lot on your mind now. Knowing you, you’re right now trying to figure me out. Although I wouldn’t be surprised if you figured it out today, I think it’ll take at least a week before you actually finally caught on.
Checking the time, I realized that I actually would have time to actually visit Erio before the day was over. Of course I’d walk you home first, Nanoha.
The next few days were okay. They weren’t what I had hoped, but at least they weren’t horrid.
Nanoha unfortunately had been a lot quieter than usual, but from the way only Suzuka and Arisa were concerned, I easily realized that you had turned to Hayate as well. She was everyone’s advisor, after all. I wouldn’t be too surprised if an Admiral one day came to her for advice.
At school, the rate of people asking you out had dropped quite a bit. I suppose with your present mood, it couldn’t be helped. But that did ease my heart quite a bit, considering how the last thing I really wanted was for people to bother you, especially like the way you were right now.
You still talked to us, but it was somewhat more reserved than it usually was, even for you. You’d put up a front, but it was easy to see through. All of us could see it, and I’m sure you’re aware of it. But you keep that front up, so that other people don’t bother you as much. At least that was a good thing, but sooner or later, you’re going to have to let it out. But then again, I guess it couldn’t be helped. I mean, I did drop quite a hint.
It was now Wednesday, and you were still out of it.
And instead of being there with you, I was now on the roof with Hayate.
“Looks like you took some of my advice and didn’t drop the bombshell on her.” That was the first thing she had to say?! But then again, it was just like Hayate to be direct and to the point.
“She came to me on Sunday,” she continued on. “Remember how I had said that she just needed that nudge? Well that was more like a push unfortunately. I don’t know what you did, nor do I want to know, but now she’s confused. I just want to warn you that she doesn’t understand what she’s feeling, and might turn to you for answers.”
“Me?!”
“You can’t expect to have made a leak and not answer to it,” she simply replied back. She made it sound like it was the most simplest of things. Give me a break here; it was nerve-racking as it was trying to get it done in the first place. But I guess it couldn’t be helped. I did say all that to Nanoha.
“Just be more careful with your words next time, Fate-chan,” she said sighed. “I don’t want to Nanoha to get hurt. And the last thing I need is you two to get into a disagreement. Besides, that would mean I could only have one of you two if I ever get that unit I was talking about.” I simply nodded.
“Anyways, enough with the gloom. The others are waiting for us.” Suddenly grabbing my hand, Hayate started to drag me all the day down. If it weren’t for school, she’d probably just call up Rein, and jump right off and fly down.
Even after talking to Hayate, you never said a thing to me throughout the rest of the week.
What in the world was going on? This was out of character, even for you. I just hope nothing’s wrong. Although it might’ve been a mistake on my part for making such an irrational decision like that and drop as many hints as I did.
Today, you were really out of character. You were extremely jumpy, as if you were nervous about something. Was there something wrong about what I had told you that had gotten you like this? Or was it something else? Because throughout the entire day, you prematurely said “No I’m not interesting in going to the dance” to nearly every question that came from a guy, some who were simply asking for homework problems. That was one of the greater issues.
Another was the fact you actually got up and left the classroom when we had changed for PE. By the time everyone else was heading out, you had returned fully changed, with your uniform in hand. That raised quite a few alarms in my mind. Was someone bullying you, or harassing you that I wasn’t aware of? You never had such reservations about changing in front of other females before, so why now?
You definitely must continue with this fic, you made me read this part of chapter 4 and now I can’t wait for more.
Don’t worry too much about the “constructive criticism” made by Satashi, an average reader like me normally doesn’t worry about that kind of technical stuff if the fic can be read without problems, the only thing that that really matters is if you like writing it and if the readers are enjoying your work as well.
Saludos, Haru
The sound of an annoyingly peppy J-pop song woke me very rudely from my sleep. My eyes opened lightly and say the image of Nanoha literally falling out of my bed as she reached towards the phone on my dresser. A few seconds passed as the song continued before I saw a hand reach up and flip open the phone to cut it off. It was way too early to be awake, especially after staying up until three in the morning tutoring my friend. Her figure appeared slowly as she crawled up from the floor and stretched out widely in an attempt to wake herself up more. Finally she turned to me and bent over so our faces were close to each other's. A smile greeted me so I sleepily smiled back before getting a peck to the forehead. She had wanted to wake up a little early today and the reason became clear when she reached into her backpack and pulled out a girlish diary, complete with a small golden key to unlock the side strap keeping it closed. Ignoring my friend's desire to write her thoughts in a book, I closed my eyes and tried to get another half hour of sleep before school.
Saved by the Bell V
By: Satashi
Fuyu no Sora
2008-01-11, 20:57
The sound of an annoyingly peppy J-pop song woke me very rudely from my sleep. My eyes opened lightly and say the image of Nanoha literally falling out of my bed as she reached towards the phone on my dresser. A few seconds passed as the song continued before I saw a hand reach up and flip open the phone to cut it off. It was way too early to be awake, especially after staying up until three in the morning tutoring my friend. Her figure appeared slowly as she crawled up from the floor and stretched out widely in an attempt to wake herself up more. Finally she turned to me and bent over so our faces were close to each other's. A smile greeted me so I sleepily smiled back before getting a peck to the forehead. She had wanted to wake up a little early today and the reason became clear when she reached into her backpack and pulled out a girlish diary, complete with a small golden key to unlock the side strap keeping it closed. Ignoring my friend's desire to write her thoughts in a book, I closed my eyes and tried to get another half hour of sleep before school.
Saved by the Bell V
By: Satashi
Lol about Nanoha and Yuuno sleeping together :heh:. I can't help but feel amused by the image of Yuuno being annoyed by Nanoha's alarm and trying to get a few more precious minutes of sleep, ha ha xD.
Nice intro there ^^ Let's hope the chapter will be done and posted tonight ^^
ghazghkull
2008-01-11, 20:59
The sound of an annoyingly peppy J-pop song woke me very rudely from my sleep. My eyes opened lightly and say the image of Nanoha literally falling out of my bed as she reached towards the phone on my dresser. A few seconds passed as the song continued before I saw a hand reach up and flip open the phone to cut it off. It was way too early to be awake, especially after staying up until three in the morning tutoring my friend. Her figure appeared slowly as she crawled up from the floor and stretched out widely in an attempt to wake herself up more. Finally she turned to me and bent over so our faces were close to each other's. A smile greeted me so I sleepily smiled back before getting a peck to the forehead. She had wanted to wake up a little early today and the reason became clear when she reached into her backpack and pulled out a girlish diary, complete with a small golden key to unlock the side strap keeping it closed. Ignoring my friend's desire to write her thoughts in a book, I closed my eyes and tried to get another half hour of sleep before school.
Saved by the Bell V
By: Satashi
Wah wah wah wah?!!! Wah....*clicks* OH!!! It's Yuuno....wow....I had a wth moment there, thinking it was Fate for some odd reason...><
Hahaha, maybe I should make it a little more clear it's Yuuno :3
1k words so far. Sora-chan is distracting me with IMs, blame her for it being late >: D
edit: Sorry this won't be posted tonight. I'm not feeling the best so I'm going to lay down. I'll have this out tomorrow afternoon.
SpaceBrotha
2008-01-11, 21:15
The sound of an annoyingly peppy J-pop song woke me very rudely from my sleep. My eyes opened lightly and say the image of Nanoha literally falling out of my bed as she reached towards the phone on my dresser. A few seconds passed as the song continued before I saw a hand reach up and flip open the phone to cut it off. It was way too early to be awake, especially after staying up until three in the morning tutoring my friend. Her figure appeared slowly as she crawled up from the floor and stretched out widely in an attempt to wake herself up more. Finally she turned to me and bent over so our faces were close to each other's. A smile greeted me so I sleepily smiled back before getting a peck to the forehead. She had wanted to wake up a little early today and the reason became clear when she reached into her backpack and pulled out a girlish diary, complete with a small golden key to unlock the side strap keeping it closed. Ignoring my friend's desire to write her thoughts in a book, I closed my eyes and tried to get another half hour of sleep before school.
Saved by the Bell V
By: Satashi
Wait, that's yuuno?! :twitch:
err, i can just imagine the look on fate's face if someone informs her of that little arrangement... :D
"They sleep with each other every now and then."
fate::twitch:...:twitch:..."They what?!"
And it's misunderstandings galore after that. :D
Fuyu no Sora
2008-01-11, 21:41
Hahaha, maybe I should make it a little more clear it's Yuuno :3
1k words so far. Sora-chan is distracting me with IMs, blame her for it being late >: D
Oi, wait a minute, why is it my fault? :heh:
Wait, that's yuuno?! :twitch:
err, i can just imagine the look on fate's face if someone informs her of that little arrangement... :D
"They sleep with each other every now and then."
fate::twitch:...:twitch:..."They what?!"
And it's misunderstandings galore after that. :D
He he he he he :D *RH Total anihilation grin*
That'd be WIN and GOLD!!!! :D:D:D:D:D:D
Misunderstandings FTW! :D:D
SpaceBrotha
2008-01-11, 22:00
He he he he he :D *RH Total anihilation grin*
That'd be WIN and GOLD!!!! :D:D:D:D:D:D
Misunderstandings FTW! :D:D
when asked for explanation, i can just imagine nanoha explaining it with
"he's comfy and warm, why don't you join us sometime fate-chan?"
Followed by the very same face that fate has in satashi's avatar :D
Edit: Rest up satashi, if you're too tired to think straight, your stories will end up having excess amounts of crack, hilarious, and reanimated chipmunks on fire.
Edit 2: note to self (6am): do not take naps during the day even if you're tired... :uhoh:
Saved by the Bell V
Status: Complete, pending spellcheck/revisions
Length:5,588 words
Well, I couldn't sleep and stayed up till midnight to write it. I'm going to review it when I wake up and probably change things. *yawns sleepily* But I got it done <3 Hope everyone enjoys.
ghazghkull
2008-01-12, 01:15
Looking forward to the update ^^
Kirika-chan
2008-01-12, 03:55
Well here's what I have so far for Road of Love, before I had decided to call it quits back then.
Please comment on what's provided.
Road of Love
Chapter IV
You simply looked at me strangely at that response. I suppose it couldn’t be helped, since I was a bit vague with it, but like you said, you wanted to figure it out yourself. And considering the way you looked at me, you just maybe needed a few nudges, and then there, you’ve found me.
We spent the next little while in relative silence.
At least I learned one thing: she’s opened to being a lesbian, but the actual relationship aspects was what she was shaky about. I could live with that. At least there’s hope.
The only problem would be how everyone outside our circle of friends would handle it, but I think she’s another bridge that’ll be crossed when we got to it. If all goes well, we’ll cross that bridge together. And I promise you Nanoha, I’ll be strong for you if all goes wrong.
We stayed here for quite a while, before you finally decided to call it in early, and the two of us headed home. We didn’t say much. That expression on your face was enough to tell me you had a lot on your mind now. Knowing you, you’re right now trying to figure me out. Although I wouldn’t be surprised if you figured it out today, I think it’ll take at least a week before you actually finally caught on.
Checking the time, I realized that I actually would have time to actually visit Erio before the day was over. Of course I’d walk you home first, Nanoha.
The next few days were okay. They weren’t what I had hoped, but at least they weren’t horrid.
Nanoha unfortunately had been a lot quieter than usual, but from the way only Suzuka and Arisa were concerned, I easily realized that you had turned to Hayate as well. She was everyone’s advisor, after all. I wouldn’t be too surprised if an Admiral one day came to her for advice.
At school, the rate of people asking you out had dropped quite a bit. I suppose with your present mood, it couldn’t be helped. But that did ease my heart quite a bit, considering how the last thing I really wanted was for people to bother you, especially like the way you were right now.
You still talked to us, but it was somewhat more reserved than it usually was, even for you. You’d put up a front, but it was easy to see through. All of us could see it, and I’m sure you’re aware of it. But you keep that front up, so that other people don’t bother you as much. At least that was a good thing, but sooner or later, you’re going to have to let it out. But then again, I guess it couldn’t be helped. I mean, I did drop quite a hint.
It was now Wednesday, and you were still out of it.
And instead of being there with you, I was now on the roof with Hayate.
“Looks like you took some of my advice and didn’t drop the bombshell on her.” That was the first thing she had to say?! But then again, it was just like Hayate to be direct and to the point.
“She came to me on Sunday,” she continued on. “Remember how I had said that she just needed that nudge? Well that was more like a push unfortunately. I don’t know what you did, nor do I want to know, but now she’s confused. I just want to warn you that she doesn’t understand what she’s feeling, and might turn to you for answers.”
“Me?!”
“You can’t expect to have made a leak and not answer to it,” she simply replied back. She made it sound like it was the most simplest of things. Give me a break here; it was nerve-racking as it was trying to get it done in the first place. But I guess it couldn’t be helped. I did say all that to Nanoha.
“Just be more careful with your words next time, Fate-chan,” she said sighed. “I don’t want to Nanoha to get hurt. And the last thing I need is you two to get into a disagreement. Besides, that would mean I could only have one of you two if I ever get that unit I was talking about.” I simply nodded.
“Anyways, enough with the gloom. The others are waiting for us.” Suddenly grabbing my hand, Hayate started to drag me all the day down. If it weren’t for school, she’d probably just call up Rein, and jump right off and fly down.
Even after talking to Hayate, you never said a thing to me throughout the rest of the week.
What in the world was going on? This was out of character, even for you. I just hope nothing’s wrong. Although it might’ve been a mistake on my part for making such an irrational decision like that and drop as many hints as I did.
Today, you were really out of character. You were extremely jumpy, as if you were nervous about something. Was there something wrong about what I had told you that had gotten you like this? Or was it something else? Because throughout the entire day, you prematurely said “No I’m not interesting in going to the dance” to nearly every question that came from a guy, some who were simply asking for homework problems. That was one of the greater issues.
Another was the fact you actually got up and left the classroom when we had changed for PE. By the time everyone else was heading out, you had returned fully changed, with your uniform in hand. That raised quite a few alarms in my mind. Was someone bullying you, or harassing you that I wasn’t aware of? You never had such reservations about changing in front of other females before, so why now?
I want to see the next >.< it's too short!
And Nanoha will be bullying? ... I don't think :p (it's for Fate! XD)
@Satashi : I hope you post the chapter V for this evening (evening for me...) *___*
Saved by the Bell V
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3991951/5/Saved_by_the_Bell
Enjoy ^^ lots of N/F fluff
SpaceBrotha
2008-01-12, 14:08
Wait, that's yuuno?! :twitch:
err, i can just imagine the look on fate's face if someone informs her of that little arrangement... :D
"They sleep with each other every now and then."
fate::twitch:...:twitch:..."They what?!"
And it's misunderstandings galore after that. :D
Saved by the Bell V
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3991951/5/Saved_by_the_Bell
Enjoy ^^ lots of N/F fluff
Well, i definitely saw that one coming :D
atleast the part that's in my quote ;)
anyway, fun chapter (a troubled fate is fine too) which also gives us general info about yuuno...
...now then, i wonder how we'll continue from here, seems like the premise is set, and something dramatic and/or important can happen now... :cool:
Anyway, i'm looking forward to the next installment of Nanoha ~ the collectible card game. :p
Edit: Woo! Page claim!
Well, i definitely saw that one coming :D
atleast the part that's in my quote ;)
anyway, fun chapter (a troubled fate is fine too) which also gives us general info about yuuno...
...now then, i wonder how we'll continue from here, seems like the premise is set, and something dramatic and/or important can happen now... :cool:
Anyway, i'm looking forward to the next installment of Nanoha ~ the collectible card game. :p
Edit: Woo! Page claim!
Yeah, I was a little " *flailing!*" when I saw people totally predicting that, but I couldn't change it ><
And yes, Nanoha is a little confused already, so it's set for more confusion and doubt XD so now you get the "come on get togehter already!" that I'm going to abuse and abuse lol
Sam the Onion
2008-01-12, 14:43
Yeah, I was a little " *flailing!*" when I saw people totally predicting that, but I couldn't change it ><
And yes, Nanoha is a little confused already, so it's set for more confusion and doubt XD so now you get the "come on get togehter already!" that I'm going to abuse and abuse lol
Continous self-denial of relationship is the best teasing a writer can do :p
I can't see how I ever missed chapter 4, so the plot was strangely jumped for me. Enjoyed it very much nonetheless.
ghazghkull
2008-01-12, 14:45
*Keels over from all the cuteness*
wow....so much fluff....I think I'm going to have diabetes for this LOL XD
I LOVE IT!!! :love::love::love::love:
My only problem is that you misused the word farther, when it should've been furthered.
That's the only mistake I noticed ;)
And yes, Nanoha is a little confused already, so it's set for more confusion and doubt XD so now you get the "come on get togehter already!" that I'm going to abuse and abuse lol
lol
It sounds good.
BTW nice chapter as always, I loved the fluff :)
My only problem is that you misused the word farther, when it should've been furthered.
That's the only mistake I noticed ;)
Also there is a "story" instead of "store", but isn't a big deal.
Saludos, Haru
SpaceBrotha
2008-01-12, 14:54
Yeah, I was a little " *flailing!*" when I saw people totally predicting that, but I couldn't change it ><
And yes, Nanoha is a little confused already, so it's set for more confusion and doubt XD so now you get the "come on get togehter already!" that I'm going to abuse and abuse lol
Sorry about that, just saw a potential for hilarious actions and proclaimed it out loud before thinking it through :heh:
And yes, the most frustrating part about a forming relationship like that is the "i think/i do like her, but i'm afraid to confess" usually drives everyone around them up the wall in frustration :rolleyes:
I do remember seeing something alike that IRL, though it was a boy and girl... after two months of dodginess i got fed up with it, sat them together and explained it to them, sorta like kickstarting their relationship... :heh:
Nearly got my face relocated to the back of my head in the process... people tend to be rather aggressive when someone starts blurting out secrets like that. :p
I suppose it's arika's job to be the frustrated one when fate and nanoha start getting dodgy about their feelings... ;)
Stupid typos. If only Fanfiction.net was easier to alter stories after being posted >< I've had problems with "replacing" chapters with typo-free ones and ended up losing all reviews for that chapter and other random errors in it -.-
Currently I'm debating continuing from them waking up in the morning or if I want to skip about another week. I need time to pass by >< but I can't skip too much at once. They've known each other for about a month now. Fate's been crushing since day two, Nanoha is just now starting to get confused but hasn't realized anything yet.
Continuing from the wake up will give more fluffy moments, and a funny moment where Nanoha finds something rather embarrassing for Fate in the dresser and ends up with a compromising position and Precia walking in on them. Mainly for laughs and putting Fate in a very embarrassing situation
Continuing new chapter from a few days down the line gives more time for feelings to settle and generally lets me get into the plot sooner instead of using 1k words on something that won't progress the storyline. Enter Nanoha's modeling tryouts and stuff.
ghazghkull
2008-01-12, 15:22
Stupid typos. If only Fanfiction.net was easier to alter stories after being posted >< I've had problems with "replacing" chapters with typo-free ones and ended up losing all reviews for that chapter and other random errors in it -.-
Currently I'm debating continuing from them waking up in the morning or if I want to skip about another week. I need time to pass by >< but I can't skip too much at once. They've known each other for about a month now. Fate's been crushing since day two, Nanoha is just now starting to get confused but hasn't realized anything yet.
Continuing from the wake up will give more fluffy moments, and a funny moment where Nanoha finds something rather embarrassing for Fate in the dresser and ends up with a compromising position and Precia walking in on them. Mainly for laughs and putting Fate in a very embarrassing situation
Continuing new chapter from a few days down the line gives more time for feelings to settle and generally lets me get into the plot sooner instead of using 1k words on something that won't progress the storyline. Enter Nanoha's modeling tryouts and stuff.
Not sure...because it really depends on what you want to happen. Personally I'd incorporate both. Set aside around 1k of just fluff, and add that onto the progression.
What I mean is that you just write the few days later part, where Nanoha's building up the courage to model and such, throwing in some cute and fluff moments while you're at it ;)
Once you're satisfied with that, you can go back and write the fluffy and embarrassing moment and blend it in with what you've already written so that it can transition from morning, to a few days later.
I do that a lot, but that's part of my writing style so I usually transition as I write ;)
That's just what I'd do since I'd like to build up more on the romance more than anything, since that's part of the main focus of the story, unless there are other plot elements I want to exploit that helps build up in the relation, like in this case, Fate helping Nanoha build up her courage, which I might add, WAS WAY TOO CUTE!!! XD
Anyways that's my two-cents on that.
And on an off-note, I can't seem to sit down long enough to get my brain going long enough to come up with anything to write for Road of Love XD :p
Stupid typos. If only Fanfiction.net was easier to alter stories after being posted >< I've had problems with "replacing" chapters with typo-free ones and ended up losing all reviews for that chapter and other random errors in it -.-
Currently I'm debating continuing from them waking up in the morning or if I want to skip about another week. I need time to pass by >< but I can't skip too much at once. They've known each other for about a month now. Fate's been crushing since day two, Nanoha is just now starting to get confused but hasn't realized anything yet.
Continuing from the wake up will give more fluffy moments, and a funny moment where Nanoha finds something rather embarrassing for Fate in the dresser and ends up with a compromising position and Precia walking in on them. Mainly for laughs and putting Fate in a very embarrassing situation
Continuing new chapter from a few days down the line gives more time for feelings to settle and generally lets me get into the plot sooner instead of using 1k words on something that won't progress the storyline. Enter Nanoha's modeling tryouts and stuff.
Free fluff is always welcomed :D, I don't mind reading "filler" in this fic since we're getting an average of a chapter each two days...
...But I wonder what would be that "rather embarrassing something" ? :uhoh:
Saludos, Haru
Fuyu no Sora
2008-01-12, 15:31
Stupid typos. If only Fanfiction.net was easier to alter stories after being posted >< I've had problems with "replacing" chapters with typo-free ones and ended up losing all reviews for that chapter and other random errors in it -.-
Currently I'm debating continuing from them waking up in the morning or if I want to skip about another week. I need time to pass by >< but I can't skip too much at once. They've known each other for about a month now. Fate's been crushing since day two, Nanoha is just now starting to get confused but hasn't realized anything yet.
Continuing from the wake up will give more fluffy moments, and a funny moment where Nanoha finds something rather embarrassing for Fate in the dresser and ends up with a compromising position and Precia walking in on them. Mainly for laughs and putting Fate in a very embarrassing situation
Continuing new chapter from a few days down the line gives more time for feelings to settle and generally lets me get into the plot sooner instead of using 1k words on something that won't progress the storyline. Enter Nanoha's modeling tryouts and stuff.
I vote for the 'start from the wake up'.
I'd just loooooooooooove to see Precia's reaction at finding those two dressed in only lingerie :D:D I can already imagine her teasing Fate until the latter puts a tomato to shame XD! :D:D:D:D (probably not gonna happen but w/e. Its fun to imagine :p)
SpaceBrotha
2008-01-12, 15:41
Stupid typos. If only Fanfiction.net was easier to alter stories after being posted >< I've had problems with "replacing" chapters with typo-free ones and ended up losing all reviews for that chapter and other random errors in it -.-
Currently I'm debating continuing from them waking up in the morning or if I want to skip about another week. I need time to pass by >< but I can't skip too much at once. They've known each other for about a month now. Fate's been crushing since day two, Nanoha is just now starting to get confused but hasn't realized anything yet.
Continuing from the wake up will give more fluffy moments, and a funny moment where Nanoha finds something rather embarrassing for Fate in the dresser and ends up with a compromising position and Precia walking in on them. Mainly for laughs and putting Fate in a very embarrassing situation
Continuing new chapter from a few days down the line gives more time for feelings to settle and generally lets me get into the plot sooner instead of using 1k words on something that won't progress the storyline. Enter Nanoha's modeling tryouts and stuff.
I agree with ghazghkull here, write the morning as a short piece and then jump a few days ahead... the entire morning plot seems to be hilarious so i'm all for it...
...you could have either one waking up before the other and have a lot of hilarious stuff to tell.
nanoha wakes first -> sneaks out of bed -> checks dresser -> pick up suspicious item -> fate wakes up and sees nanoha with said item -> OH SNAP! :D
or have fate wake up and notice that they've changed positions during the night, from their cuddle to something far more provocative (or just having a very good sight of something ;)), and have her go ballistic because of it. :D
Anyways, looking forward to reading it :D
Sam the Onion
2008-01-12, 15:47
Stupid typos. If only Fanfiction.net was easier to alter stories after being posted >< I've had problems with "replacing" chapters with typo-free ones and ended up losing all reviews for that chapter and other random errors in it -.-
Currently I'm debating continuing from them waking up in the morning or if I want to skip about another week. I need time to pass by >< but I can't skip too much at once. They've known each other for about a month now. Fate's been crushing since day two, Nanoha is just now starting to get confused but hasn't realized anything yet.
Continuing from the wake up will give more fluffy moments, and a funny moment where Nanoha finds something rather embarrassing for Fate in the dresser and ends up with a compromising position and Precia walking in on them. Mainly for laughs and putting Fate in a very embarrassing situation
Continuing new chapter from a few days down the line gives more time for feelings to settle and generally lets me get into the plot sooner instead of using 1k words on something that won't progress the storyline. Enter Nanoha's modeling tryouts and stuff.
Plot is going to happen anyway, but if we skip the wake up fluff, it will only come back haunting in the shape of teasing Precia. Not to mention that the entire scene is highly wanted material :D
So my vote is wake up scene if this is a vote.
Haha, seems like people want fluff so fluff you shall get.
Remember, that I do always listen to my friends here, and even you lurkers too. Come on out and say what you want to not only me but all other writers as well ^^ we love hearing input so always be sure to say what's on your mind! :D :D
Fluff incoming. As for the item Nanoha finds....something interesting but still within the lines of Fate's personality *halo* fan service for the sake of relationship building
ghazghkull
2008-01-12, 15:59
Haha, seems like people want fluff so fluff you shall get.
Remember, that I do always listen to my friends here, and even you lurkers too. Come on out and say what you want to not only me but all other writers as well ^^ we love hearing input so always be sure to say what's on your mind! :D :D
Fluff incoming. As for the item Nanoha finds....something interesting but still within the lines of Fate's personality *halo* fan service for the sake of relationship building
Why do I have a sneaking suspicion you are going to kill a lot of people and blow up a lot of people's mind with the newest update? :heh:
Oh this should be fun :heh:
SpaceBrotha
2008-01-12, 16:11
Haha, seems like people want fluff so fluff you shall get.
Remember, that I do always listen to my friends here, and even you lurkers too. Come on out and say what you want to not only me but all other writers as well ^^ we love hearing input so always be sure to say what's on your mind! :D :D
Fluff incoming. As for the item Nanoha finds....something interesting but still within the lines of Fate's personality *halo* fan service for the sake of relationship building
Why do i have a premonition of an enormous amount of bleeding noses in the next chapter?
now that i think about it, it's almost a good thing that you don't decorate your stories with images like some other authors i've seen... an image with nanoha and fate in the depicted lingerie probably would have wiped out half of the people reading the story :D
Why do i have a premonition of an enormous amount of bleeding noses in the next chapter?
now that i think about it, it's almost a good thing that you don't decorate your stories with images like some other authors i've seen... an image with nanoha and fate in the depicted lingerie probably would have wiped out half of the people reading the story :D
You mean like this NSFW image?
http://i55.photobucket.com/albums/g140/LeviValor/cube.jpg
fanart ftw
SpaceBrotha
2008-01-12, 16:21
You mean like this NSFW image?
http://i55.photobucket.com/albums/g140/LeviValor/cube.jpg
fanart ftw
:twitch:
quite, now if you'll excuse me, i need to remove the surprise paint from my table, and get some sleep... :p
Fluff incoming. As for the item Nanoha finds....something interesting but still within the lines of Fate's personality *halo* fan service for the sake of relationship building
Haha that's what I fear, according to your Fate-chan’s personality I wouldn’t be surprised with anything in that closet, I can even expect a Mexican jumping bean or takos in there.
You mean like this NSFW image?
http://i55.photobucket.com/albums/g140/LeviValor/cube.jpg
fanart ftw
Wow
Nice! who did it?
It really was fast :)
Saludos, Haru
I can even expect a Mexican jumping bean or takos in there.
Don't spoil it T_T
Wow
Nice! who did it?
It really was fast :)
Saludos, Haru
Broken Wing Studios is doing it for me. She's an artist friend who I share my stories and ideas with before I write them. She's also the one who did the picture of Fate plucking Nanoha's eyebrows. It's going to be colored shortly ^^
Reiji Tabibito
2008-01-12, 20:04
archive post updated, please check if there are any mistakes in your section. If you are not added yet, please PM me with the information.
(Keroko please let me know what to add on yours)
On that note, I'm going to start writing on my fics now ^^;
Fast Lyrical Days. Sorry it's not too long but I want to start on SbTB as well tonight.
I was never really one to shop for girls but Nanoha's comment this morning was still bothering me. I knew she was just teasing but there was still something in the way she said it, some faint hint of sadness, that I couldn't help but pick up on. This thought ran over in my mind again and again as I looked at what was before me. Nothing caught my eye right away and I almost gave up on the store before finding something that looked promising. The glass jewelry cases in the middle of the store grabbed my attention, or rather a bracelet inside of it did. A medium sized linked silver bracelet was sparkling in the light almost as if calling out to me. On it was one matching silver charm in the shape of a heart.
'A charm bracelet,' I realized, looking at the several types of charms that could be added to it. 'Simple, pretty, shiny, and it just screams Nanoha.' I stood up straight and met the clerk's eye to call them over to me and ten minutes later I was back out in the cold, now fifty dollars lighter. Although the blow to my wallet stung, I was rather pleased with my purchase. Nanoha was always there for me, it was about time I showed my appreciation.
“I'm home!” I called out as always when I opened the door to the house I now shared with two girls.
Nanoha, as always, came to me with a smile. “Welcome home. You hungry?”
“Starving.” My reply seemed to make her happy. “Something smells good.”
“Pizza,” The girl informed me while rocking on her heels while waiting on me to finish taking off my shoes. “How was Hayate-chan?”
“A lot better.” Walking in, I held up the bag so she could see it. “I have something for you.”
“Oh?” Her face lit with curiosity. “What is it?”
“It's a box.” I took out the long slender jewelry case and held back a chuckle at Nanoha's reaction to cover her mouth in surprise. “Sure are happy about a box.”
“What's in it?” She reached for it and pouted when I moved it away. Trying again, she stood on her tip toes and reached for the case when I held it up. “Stop teasing me!”
“But it's fun.” I let her try once again before bringing it down and handing it to her. “Here, I hope you like.”
“I will,” She assured me before happily clicking open the case and fawning over the simple gift. “Awwwww, it's so kyute!”
“...Did you just say 'kyute'?”
“What on Earth made you buy me a gift?” She sounded happier than I've heard her in the past month or so. “Aw, I love it. A little heart and everything.” The bracelet was put on and looked at again now that it was on her wrist. “Thank you!” I got a tight hug, which I returned.
“I just thought I'd get it for you. No reason really.”
“You're the best.” To my surprise Nanoha got on her tiptoes and pecked my cheek. “Thanks a lot.”
“Welcome.” I touched the spot I was kissed and felt my lips turn up lightly to a smile. “You haven't kissed me in ages.”
“Well, if you would do things to warrant it, I'd kiss you more often.” She had a faint tint of blush on her cheeks, keeping her eyes on the sparking bracelet still. She stared at it for a moment longer before suddenly gasping out. “The pizza!” Quickly she ran to the kitchen and pulled the oven door open, quickly taking out the food. “Oh thank goodness, it's just a little brown on top.” Sliding it onto a cutting board, she went to dust her peel with corn starch before slipping the next one onto it. “Yuuno-kun, this one is yours. It'll take about six minutes so get comfortable and I'll bring it to you when it's done okay?”
“Hmmm....” I hopped on the kitchen counter instead and watched her. “It's quiet tonight, where's Fate at?”
“She ate dinner and conked out. Said she had a hard day.” The girl closed the oven door and walked over to me. Turning around, she faced the same way I was and leaned back against me, pulling my arms to wrap around her front. “It's a little chilly in here.”
“Put on clothes.” I teased. The girl was in her pajamas, which consisted of nothing more than a large shirt that went to her knees.
“But this is comfortable.” She protested while playing with my hands, eyes still darting to the gift she was wearing. “And you're warm.”
“Keep moving my hands like that and I'll end up feeling you up.”
“I don't mind,” She replied airily. “Go for it.”
“...I really will if you say that.”
“Then do it.”
“...I'm not in the mood.”
“Sure,” She giggled to herself and I couldn't help but chuckle. “Ne, question?”
“Yes?”
Nanoha looked over her shoulder at me. “Am I feminine?”
“What do you mean?” I blinked. “Such a sudden question.”
“Hm. Well,” She thought about it. “I kind of get love letters every now and then, but they are normally from people I don't even know. I have a fanclub you know?”
“I know.” I hated those guys. A group of about fifteen that basically worshiped the ground Nanoha walked on.
“But besides those, I don't really get any attention. Am I not feminine enough? Am I attractive?” I pondered it, allowing her to turn around in my arms and look at me. “Even you don't ever look at me when you have the chance.”
“I look at you all the time.”
“Not when I'm naked.”
I blinked. “You want me to look at you naked?”
“No!” She shook her head. “I mean when the situation comes up, when I walk across the hall in only a towel or something. Your eyes never once dropped to look. Am I not feminine?”
Acting on impulse, I reached forward and popped the top snap-buttons on Nanoha's shirt open, revealing her breast fully. “Hmmm.... I give you about an eight.”
Her face slowly turned scarlet but stood there a full five seconds before letting out a 'kya!' and turning around to button them. “Pervert!”
“Yup. I get that way around very feminine women.”
Nanoha slowed down her buttoning and looked back over at me, smiling. “I'll forgive you this time.”
“Thank you,” I teased back.
“But next time,” She winked. “I might just slap you.”
“You want a next time?”
“Maybe, nyaha!” With that she went over to the oven and checked my food. I didn't understand girls sometimes, but right now I could tell Nanoha was happy. She really wanted attention and a little encouragement that she was pretty. I had given her both tonight and her smile was really cute right now. It was this simple moment that made me glad we shared a house together.
~**~
Sunday again; a day off with nothing to do. From the burning smell of death coming from my door I could tell Fate was trying to make breakfast. After a glance out my window I saw Nanoha outside playing in the snow. I knew already that Hayate was going to be shopping today so she could get out of the house. As for me...
A.) Nanoha was so happy last night, I really should treat her to something today to make sure she knows that I appreciate her.
B.) I did say I would take Fate out sometime... but since I bought a gift, it will be a cheap date, would she even like that?
C.) I can probably meet up with Hayate for lunch, if I don't die from Fate's breakfast. A good meal sounds good.
This is good stuff - been lurking here and there in the former thread - but never really got involved...
THAT'S GONNA CHANGE!
To Satashi:
I realize this long after the last Lyrical Days post, you may have closed voting...
but if you're still taking votes:
A
for me.
I would vote B, but Yuuno's comment on a cheap date for Fate has made me think twice...
You mean like this NSFW image?
http://i55.photobucket.com/albums/g140/LeviValor/cube.jpg
fanart ftw
I noticed something, ¿isn’t Fate-chan supposed to still use ponytails in your fic?
I wonder if she is going to change her hair style during your fic… please don’t respond me this last question, I don’t want to spoil myself again :heh:
Saludos, Haru
This is good stuff - been lurking here and there in the former thread - but never really got involved...
THAT'S GONNA CHANGE!
Glad to have you along for the ride ^^I'll definetly count your vite.
I noticed something, ¿isn’t Fate-chan supposed to still use ponytails in your fic?
I wonder if she is going to change her hair style during your fic… please don’t respond me this last question, I don’t want to spoil myself again :heh:
Saludos, Haru
She let them down when she changed clothes <.< >.> yeah
Aaron008R
2008-01-12, 22:47
archive post updated, please check if there are any mistakes in your section. If you are not added yet, please PM me with the information.
(Keroko please let me know what to add on yours)
On that note, I'm going to start writing on my fics now ^^;
Fast Lyrical Days. Sorry it's not too long but I want to start on SbTB as well tonight.
I was never really one to shop for girls but Nanoha's comment this morning was still bothering me. I knew she was just teasing but there was still something in the way she said it, some faint hint of sadness, that I couldn't help but pick up on. This thought ran over in my mind again and again as I looked at what was before me. Nothing caught my eye right away and I almost gave up on the store before finding something that looked promising. The glass jewelry cases in the middle of the store grabbed my attention, or rather a bracelet inside of it did. A medium sized linked silver bracelet was sparkling in the light almost as if calling out to me. On it was one matching silver charm in the shape of a heart.
'A charm bracelet,' I realized, looking at the several types of charms that could be added to it. 'Simple, pretty, shiny, and it just screams Nanoha.' I stood up straight and met the clerk's eye to call them over to me and ten minutes later I was back out in the cold, now fifty dollars lighter. Although the blow to my wallet stung, I was rather pleased with my purchase. Nanoha was always there for me, it was about time I showed my appreciation.
“I'm home!” I called out as always when I opened the door to the house I now shared with two girls.
Nanoha, as always, came to me with a smile. “Welcome home. You hungry?”
“Starving.” My reply seemed to make her happy. “Something smells good.”
“Pizza,” The girl informed me while rocking on her heels while waiting on me to finish taking off my shoes. “How was Hayate-chan?”
“A lot better.” Walking in, I held up the bag so she could see it. “I have something for you.”
“Oh?” Her face lit with curiosity. “What is it?”
“It's a box.” I took out the long slender jewelry case and held back a chuckle at Nanoha's reaction to cover her mouth in surprise. “Sure are happy about a box.”
“What's in it?” She reached for it and pouted when I moved it away. Trying again, she stood on her tip toes and reached for the case when I held it up. “Stop teasing me!”
“But it's fun.” I let her try once again before bringing it down and handing it to her. “Here, I hope you like.”
“I will,” She assured me before happily clicking open the case and fawning over the simple gift. “Awwwww, it's so kyute!”
“...Did you just say 'kyute'?”
“What on Earth made you buy me a gift?” She sounded happier than I've heard her in the past month or so. “Aw, I love it. A little heart and everything.” The bracelet was put on and looked at again now that it was on her wrist. “Thank you!” I got a tight hug, which I returned.
“I just thought I'd get it for you. No reason really.”
“You're the best.” To my surprise Nanoha got on her tiptoes and pecked my cheek. “Thanks a lot.”
“Welcome.” I touched the spot I was kissed and felt my lips turn up lightly to a smile. “You haven't kissed me in ages.”
“Well, if you would do things to warrant it, I'd kiss you more often.” She had a faint tint of blush on her cheeks, keeping her eyes on the sparking bracelet still. She stared at it for a moment longer before suddenly gasping out. “The pizza!” Quickly she ran to the kitchen and pulled the oven door open, quickly taking out the food. “Oh thank goodness, it's just a little brown on top.” Sliding it onto a cutting board, she went to dust her peel with corn starch before slipping the next one onto it. “Yuuno-kun, this one is yours. It'll take about six minutes so get comfortable and I'll bring it to you when it's done okay?”
“Hmmm....” I hopped on the kitchen counter instead and watched her. “It's quiet tonight, where's Fate at?”
“She ate dinner and conked out. Said she had a hard day.” The girl closed the oven door and walked over to me. Turning around, she faced the same way I was and leaned back against me, pulling my arms to wrap around her front. “It's a little chilly in here.”
“Put on clothes.” I teased. The girl was in her pajamas, which consisted of nothing more than a large shirt that went to her knees.
“But this is comfortable.” She protested while playing with my hands, eyes still darting to the gift she was wearing. “And you're warm.”
“Keep moving my hands like that and I'll end up feeling you up.”
“I don't mind,” She replied airily. “Go for it.”
“...I really will if you say that.”
“Then do it.”
“...I'm not in the mood.”
“Sure,” She giggled to herself and I couldn't help but chuckle. “Ne, question?”
“Yes?”
Nanoha looked over her shoulder at me. “Am I feminine?”
“What do you mean?” I blinked. “Such a sudden question.”
“Hm. Well,” She thought about it. “I kind of get love letters every now and then, but they are normally from people I don't even know. I have a fanclub you know?”
“I know.” I hated those guys. A group of about fifteen that basically worshiped the ground Nanoha walked on.
“But besides those, I don't really get any attention. Am I not feminine enough? Am I attractive?” I pondered it, allowing her to turn around in my arms and look at me. “Even you don't ever look at me when you have the chance.”
“I look at you all the time.”
“Not when I'm naked.”
I blinked. “You want me to look at you naked?”
“No!” She shook her head. “I mean when the situation comes up, when I walk across the hall in only a towel or something. Your eyes never once dropped to look. Am I not feminine?”
Acting on impulse, I reached forward and popped the top snap-buttons on Nanoha's shirt open, revealing her breast fully. “Hmmm.... I give you about an eight.”
Her face slowly turned scarlet but stood there a full five seconds before letting out a 'kya!' and turning around to button them. “Pervert!”
“Yup. I get that way around very feminine women.”
Nanoha slowed down her buttoning and looked back over at me, smiling. “I'll forgive you this time.”
“Thank you,” I teased back.
“But next time,” She winked. “I might just slap you.”
“You want a next time?”
“Maybe, nyaha!” With that she went over to the oven and checked my food. I didn't understand girls sometimes, but right now I could tell Nanoha was happy. She really wanted attention and a little encouragement that she was pretty. I had given her both tonight and her smile was really cute right now. It was this simple moment that made me glad we shared a house together.
~**~
Sunday again; a day off with nothing to do. From the burning smell of death coming from my door I could tell Fate was trying to make breakfast. After a glance out my window I saw Nanoha outside playing in the snow. I knew already that Hayate was going to be shopping today so she could get out of the house. As for me...
A.) Nanoha was so happy last night, I really should treat her to something today to make sure she knows that I appreciate her.
B.) I did say I would take Fate out sometime... but since I bought a gift, it will be a cheap date, would she even like that?
C.) I can probably meet up with Hayate for lunch, if I don't die from Fate's breakfast. A good meal sounds good.
Interesting development.:D
We can still vote, right?:uhoh:
Presses A.
As much as the Hayate and Fate choices are appealing, leaving Nanoha after just one sweet time seems lacking. Who knows, it might give her the impression that Yuuno did that just because she was having a little distance tantrum. One more go for Nanoha for me.:D
BTW, I see everybody else's fics cataloged in the first page. But where are yours?:confused:
Edit: and mind you, they did have an instance where an OC character cured hayate's depression by tying her up and molesting her. just to mention one :)
Mostly false. Since the sekuhara part was mostly a ploy to open up for some psychotherapy.:p (No, I'm not a psychologist. But doing half-assed psychoanalysis is kinda a hobby of mine. >_<)
:dots: Hey don't point the finger at all of us........... Look to the guy who is the Hayate worshipper...
The way you said it made it sound sooo derogatory. XD
It's simply 'fan', not worshiper.
When I start writing the proper story to my OC's I'll post it here if anyone wants to read it. It'll make sense I promise :p
Good luck. I'd like to post GenerationS here as well. But heck, too many OC's for comfort.:heh:
I dunno, after close to a year of Kha-crack, there's little that can make me wince.
*coughKerokocoughchancoughdaycough*
>.>
That's an exageration. :p
False, even.:p
Well, you can do what I'm doing to Fall of an Empire and change it a bit. The original draft only had Vivio as a CC, as the Wolkies were part of Nighty's Saga of Saga, but to make the fanfiction version easier to read (it's usually more fun fo most people to read fanfiction about CC's then OC's), I'm introducing them to this version.
Uu~:upset:
It really makes me want to introduce GenerationS here as well...:upset::upset::upset:
But to do so, reading through a few BLUECHEESIUM-laced profiles is gonna be a tough call for the populace here...:heh:
Maybe I should do a simplified profile versions for the OC's to be used...:heh:
He was doing an awfully convincing job right up to the kiss turned heatbutt
:p :D
Good to know it was convincing.:nod:
I'll take a look at the other fics if I get the time. Still busy...:eyespin:
Fuyu no Sora
2008-01-12, 23:05
Mostly false. Since the sekuhara part was mostly a ploy to open up for some psychotherapy.:p (No, I'm not a psychologist. But doing half-assed psychoanalysis is kinda a hobby of mine. >_<)
I'd love to help you with the 'psychoanalysis-psychotherapy' part but unfortunately I still haven't started my mastery in Psychiatry :p And it can't wait a couple of years.
*coughKerokocoughchancoughdaycough*
>.>
That....was special alright :heh::heh:
Uu~:upset:
It really makes me want to introduce GenerationS here as well...:upset::upset::upset:
But to do so, reading through a few BLUECHEESIUM-laced profiles is gonna be a tough call for the populace here...:heh:
Maybe I should do a simplified profile versions for the OC's to be used...:heh:
Then why don't you do so? I always liked to read through your newly-sown BLUECHEESIUM fields :p. (And I wouldn't mind going through the BLUECHEESIUM-laced profiles once again :p:D)
Aaron008R
2008-01-12, 23:14
I'd love to help you with the 'psychoanalysis-psychotherapy' part but unfortunately I still haven't started my mastery in Psychiatry :p And it can't wait a couple of years.
Ugh...:eyespin:
Nevertheless, thanks for the thought...:heh:
Good luck on your course.:D
That....was special alright :heh::heh:
Keroko-chan (the OC) got paired off with almost every single well-known male OC.:p:D
Then why don't you do so? I always liked to read through your newly-sown BLUECHEESIUM fields :p. (And I wouldn't mind going through the BLUECHEESIUM-laced profiles once again :p:D)
Thanks.:D Maybe I will. But it would have to wait for several retconns. :heh: I'm still sorting out some details since I'm branching out from the HAXX-filled Golden Ages and going with more Canonly believable concepts.:heh: Not to mention making proper and simpler introductions for OC's, since reading through full profiles would in all honesty take too long for casual readers.:heh:
BTW, I see everybody else's fics cataloged in the first page. But where are yours?:confused:
Good luck. I'd like to post GenerationS here as well. But heck, too many OC's for comfort.:heh:
It really makes me want to introduce GenerationS here as well...:upset::upset::upset:
But to do so, reading through a few BLUECHEESIUM-laced profiles is gonna be a tough call for the populace here...:heh:
Maybe I should do a simplified profile versions for the OC's to be used...:heh:
Mine will be posted after I'm done with everyone elses. like YOURS
give me a link to your OC profiles (yopu have one like Keroko does right?)
and also fill out the little form thingy:
Title: The name of your fanfiction
genre: romance? Action?
Main couple: (can be left blank if not needed)
Summary: (a brief summary of this work, to grab people's attention)
Rating: K,T,M // P,PG,R ?
Link: a link to your fanfiction.net posting of story, or if it's only available on AnimeSuki then the post link.
If you have more than one chapter, please provide links to each post. If you have one chapter spread apart multiple post, please gather them together and place them in a single post for the ease of the people reading (the fanfiction thread is a good place to post them!)
Also, if you have a post profiling your OCs, please include it as well so I can add it in your profile.
If you are interested, please PM me the info along with any questions you may have. I'll try my best to work with you to ensure you are satisfied.
and also, don't hesitate! you or anyone else! get with me now and let's get you archived!
Fuyu no Sora
2008-01-12, 23:26
Ugh...:eyespin:
Nevertheless, thanks for the thought...:heh:
Good luck on your course.:D
:heh:
You're quite welcome :D
Thanks :D:D
Keroko-chan (the OC) got paired off with almost every single well-known male OC.:p:D
So....what we saw in the old FF thread was nothing?! :eyespin::eyespin:
I remember everyone calling her (OC of course) 'Keroko-tan' or 'Keroko-chan' for the whole day :D It was cute.
Thanks.:D Maybe I will. But it would have to wait for several retconns. :heh: I'm still sorting out some details since I'm branching out from the HAXX-filled Golden Ages and going with more Canonly believable concepts.:heh: Not to mention making proper and simpler introductions for OC's, since reading through full profiles would in all honesty take too long for casual readers.:heh:
Aww... shame. I'd really like to read the original but I lack time and will to go through the Bluecheesium warfields that exist upon OC :heh::heh: I guess I'll have to wait (shucks).
Mine will be posted after I'm done with everyone elses. like YOURS
~Heh~ :D.
give me a link to your OC profiles (yopu have one like Keroko does right?)
All Original Characters are grouped by author in the first page of OC....if I remember correctly. Erio had the courtesy (and perhaps the madness :uhoh:) of going through all of the posts to find the OCs and their authors to have them all under one same post so it'd be "easy" to find whichever you wanted info on.
Aaron008R
2008-01-12, 23:46
Mine will be posted after I'm done with everyone elses. like YOURS
Understood.
give me a link to your OC profiles (yopu have one like Keroko does right?)
and also fill out the little form thingy:
Title: The name of your fanfiction
genre: romance? Action?
Main couple: (can be left blank if not needed)
Summary: (a brief summary of this work, to grab people's attention)
Rating: K,T,M // P,PG,R ?
Link: a link to your fanfiction.net posting of story, or if it's only available on AnimeSuki then the post link.
If you have more than one chapter, please provide links to each post. If you have one chapter spread apart multiple post, please gather them together and place them in a single post for the ease of the people reading (the fanfiction thread is a good place to post them!)
Thanks a lot!:D I'll get to work on the much needed OC to FF port-over details (like what Keroko did) before my submission.:D
Also, if you have a post profiling your OCs, please include it as well so I can add it in your profile.
I will. Of course, after some recompilation.:heh:
If you are interested, please PM me the info along with any questions you may have. I'll try my best to work with you to ensure you are satisfied.
Thanks a lot.:D This does a lot to ease some of my reservations.:)
and also, don't hesitate! you or anyone else! get with me now and let's get you archived!
Well, my hesitation is more of a personal thing regarding my works.:heh: I want to make it more readable for the non-OC populace first before I port over the FF version. It's easier for everyone if my story makes more sense, right?:heh:
So....what we saw in the old FF thread was nothing?! :eyespin::eyespin:
I wouldn't say it like that.:heh: It was more due to the mass of OC's there as well as Keroko-chan's popularity.:heh::D
I remember everyone calling her (OC of course) 'Keroko-tan' or 'Keroko-chan' for the whole day :D It was cute.
That she was.:D
(NOTE: Just to avoid some confusion, there are actually 2 Keroko's for the OC thread.
Keroko: HE is the forum member. We call him Keroko-kun
Keroko: SHE is the OC. We call her Keroko-chan)
You know who was mixing up genders again, Fuyu. This time, it's the other way around. XD
Aww... shame. I'd really like to read the original but I lack time and will to go through the Bluecheesium warfields that exist upon OC :heh::heh: I guess I'll have to wait (shucks).
Thanks. I'll get to work on it after I do my assignments and review for our hour-long recitation tomorrow.:heh: (Law subjects.:heh:) The original chapter 1 can be found here (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1329607&postcount=18216)and here (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1329611&postcount=18217). (No. Please don't post this up yet. This isn't the final FF-thread version.)
All this talk of semi-integrating some of the OC stories and exposing them on this thread is quite interesting. If it's not a problem, Satashi-nyan, I may also start posting a certain thing I'm working on... *cough*
It figures on the day that I want to sleep in I would forget to turn off my alarm clock. Sure enough, as soon as the sun started coming up I heard the annoying sound of the radio cut on rather loudly. I felt a stir against my chest and realized that somewhere in the night I had sank down into the bed and shifted the pillows from my back to rest my head on. Nanoha still laid against me, just now on her side. I could tell she was partly awake now but I still wanted to sleep in if I could. Considering that we stayed up to well past three in the morning, I was in no position to jog today. Slowly I tried to move my hand to reach towards my clock but found that Nanoha was gripping it firmly in front of her chest. I really hated to move it but if I didn't then she would fully be aware of the noise and wake up. All at once I found that my hand was rather cold, once hers wasn't touching it anymore, and pressed the button to shut off the noise before lazily reclaiming my spot at Nanoha's back. To my surprise, Nanoha actually reached back and patted my body until she found my arm. Once there she trailed it to my wrist and pulled it back around her, pressing it against her chest and interlacing our fingers with her palm on the back of my hand.
Saved by the Bell VI
By: Satashi
~~~~~~~
There's your opening teaser :3
All this talk of semi-integrating some of the OC stories and exposing them on this thread is quite interesting. If it's not a problem, Satashi-nyan, I may also start posting a certain thing I'm working on... *cough*
All fanfiction is welcome here, be it OC or no. Although discussion, creation,and Bluecheesium of OC's is best for the OC thread, discussion the fanfictions of said OCs is what this board is for. So, please, make use of it.
My only concern is making it neat and orderly with the right links to profiles. I think I have the format worked out nicely, so all I need now from people is the information about said story, the links, ect.
If you want your fics archived here, please PM me and I'll do all I can for you ^^
It figures on the day that I want to sleep in I would forget to turn off my alarm clock for. Sure enough, as soon as the sun started coming up I heard the annoying sound of the radio cut on rather loudly. I felt a stir against my chest and realized that somewhere in the night I had sank down into the bed and shifted the pillows from my back to rest my head on. Nanoha still laid against me, just now on her side. I could tell she was partly awake now but I still wanted to sleep in if I could. Considering that we stayed up to well past three in the morning, I was in no position to job today. Slowly I tried to move my hand to reach towards my clock but found that Nanoha was gripping my hand firmly in front of her chest. I really hated to move it but if I didn't then she would fully be aware of the noise and wake up. All at once I found that my hand was rather cold and pressed the button to shut off the noise before lazily reclaiming my spot at Nanoha's back. To my surprise, Nanoha actually reached back and patted my body until she found my arm. Once there she trailed it to my wrist and pulled it back around her, pressing it against her chest and interlacing our fingers with her palm on the back of my hand.
Saved by the Bell VI
By: Satashi
~~~~~~~
There's your opening teaser :3
And you where thinking in depriving us of this wonderfluffy teaser? :D
Bad Satashi, baaaaaaad!
Saludos, Haru
ghazghkull
2008-01-13, 01:37
It figures on the day that I want to sleep in I would forget to turn off my alarm clock. Sure enough, as soon as the sun started coming up I heard the annoying sound of the radio cut on rather loudly. I felt a stir against my chest and realized that somewhere in the night I had sank down into the bed and shifted the pillows from my back to rest my head on. Nanoha still laid against me, just now on her side. I could tell she was partly awake now but I still wanted to sleep in if I could. Considering that we stayed up to well past three in the morning, I was in no position to jog today. Slowly I tried to move my hand to reach towards my clock but found that Nanoha was gripping it firmly in front of her chest. I really hated to move it but if I didn't then she would fully be aware of the noise and wake up. All at once I found that my hand was rather cold, once hers wasn't touching it anymore, and pressed the button to shut off the noise before lazily reclaiming my spot at Nanoha's back. To my surprise, Nanoha actually reached back and patted my body until she found my arm. Once there she trailed it to my wrist and pulled it back around her, pressing it against her chest and interlacing our fingers with her palm on the back of my hand.
Saved by the Bell VI
By: Satashi
~~~~~~~
There's your opening teaser :3
Well it looks good ^^
Can't wait to see the rest.
SpaceBrotha
2008-01-13, 01:42
Mostly false. Since the sekuhara part was mostly a ploy to open up for some psychotherapy.:p (No, I'm not a psychologist. But doing half-assed psychoanalysis is kinda a hobby of mine. >_<)
False, even.:p
Quite true, but i really didn't want to spoil that part to anyone who hasn't read it, for it was quite hilarious, and rather well done. :p
Uu~:upset:
It really makes me want to introduce GenerationS here as well...:upset::upset::upset:
But to do so, reading through a few BLUECHEESIUM-laced profiles is gonna be a tough call for the populace here...:heh:
Maybe I should do a simplified profile versions for the OC's to be used...:heh:
The only real problem with the OC's is that their stories are spread across authors... for example, keroko (keroko-kun's OC), kha(Kha's OC) and tesla(think this is keroko's as well) all turn up in your stories of aurion but there's no real way of knowing this until one reads your stories of aurion... as the authors don't keep any track of where their characters are involved (in their respective lists anyway) it makes life extremely hard for anyone wishing to read the whole thing...
...for example, i know aurion met Saga from nightengales saga of saga (or to be accurate, after Saga), but you only write to the point where aurion greets Saga, and then tell nighty to take it from there...
...i've yet to find this conversation anywhere, even though i used the search function to quite an extent. :eyespin:
If we were able to somehow make a compilation where the story starts from the beginning, and goes in a chronological order (i know you guys have the OC timeline, so that may be of use), and have everything in order, we could just dump that in it's entirety in here as a single huge fu*k off fiction, since that's what it basically is: an enormous continuous story with different authors adding new content to it every now and then. :)
All fanfiction is welcome here, be it OC or no. Although discussion, creation,and Bluecheesium of OC's is best for the OC thread, discussion the fanfictions of said OCs is what this board is for. So, please, make use of it.
My only concern is making it neat and orderly with the right links to profiles. I think I have the format worked out nicely, so all I need now from people is the information about said story, the links, ect.
If you want your fics archived here, please PM me and I'll do all I can for you ^^
5th post in the first page of OC thread has links to just about everything, and most authors there use their first posts as indexes of some kind with links to everything they've written about their characters.
Now, breakfast...
I think the best solution for situations like that would to have a multi-author spoiler tag as well on the front page. If the authors can find the post in order then I can simply link "Chapter 1, chapter 2, chapter 3, ect." like normal and add in an extra thing like
Story title:
Authors: Kha, Nighty, Keroko (and make each name clickable to lead to their profile)
Summary:
Links:
Or also, don't you guys tag your works in AU years? Liiiike "AS 075" was the storyline where Nanoha died, and I wrote the story about Yuuno and Fate's first time together ( the one Fate got pregnant in). If that's the case, we could add that in as well.
I think we should tag OC stories as "OC" in the genre section (genre: Action/adventure, Romance, Original Characters) that way people will know which stories revolve around the author's characters and which ones don't.
[edit]: Saved by the Bell VI is 1.4k words long now. stopping for the night.
Also, I think this might be a tad offtopic since discussing how things will be archived isn't actually related to Nanoha directly....so if we could, please PM me any ideas and suggestions. Once I talk to everyone I'll release a offered suggestion to everyone and we'll go from there. :D
Aaron008R
2008-01-13, 02:08
Quite true, but i really didn't want to spoil that part to anyone who hasn't read it, for it was quite hilarious, and rather well done. :p
My thanks, then.:D
The only real problem with the OC's is that their stories are spread across authors... for example, keroko (keroko-kun's OC), kha(Kha's OC) and tesla(think this is keroko's as well) all turn up in your stories of aurion but there's no real way of knowing this until one reads your stories of aurion... as the authors don't keep any track of where their characters are involved (in their respective lists anyway) it makes life extremely hard for anyone wishing to read the whole thing...
...for example, i know aurion met Saga from nightengales saga of saga (or to be accurate, after Saga), but you only write to the point where aurion greets Saga, and then tell nighty to take it from there...
Well... Actually that project is in indefinite hiatus. :-/ :heh:
I'm not even sure if I'll continue it anymore!:eyespin::heh::upset:
For now, I'm trying to do my own continuation of StrikerS. So far, only Keroko's Tesla is involved. The rest are my OC's. Thus, it shouldn't be too hard to follow compared to the grander works in there since only my and Keroko's OC's are included so far. (With Tk3997's OC's for the second half, which is still quite far off.) The timeline I'm using is heavily based on Keroko's, where Keroko-chan and Tesla are technically part of the main cast.
But still, I'll do as much necessary retcons as possible to accommodate non-OCers.:)
While addressing the general familiarity with the said OC, Aurion, Grandis, and my other OC's can be already known just from reading their profiles. But that's still a tall order since Aurion has the officially longest profile in the entire OC thread, three long posts.:heh: (sans Kha's profile, which has to be downloaded to read.:twitch:)
...i've yet to find this conversation anywhere, even though i used the search function to quite an extent. :eyespin:
You won't find it. Heck, it's been scrapped until further notice.:heh:
I've completely branched off to different timelines/stories for now.:)
If you're looking for GenerationS, the link for chapter 1 (around 11,000 words) is already in my OC list.:)
If we were able to somehow make a compilation where the story starts from the beginning, and goes in a chronological order (i know you guys have the OC timeline, so that may be of use), and have everything in order, we could just dump that in it's entirety in here as a single huge fu*k off fiction, since that's what it basically is: an enormous continuous story with different authors adding new content to it every now and then. :)
That's a feasible solution indeed.:) But the problem is not everything in the OC thread is connected.:heh: So that single fu*k off fiction is gonna get turned into a frickin large list of fu*k off fictionS...:uhoh::heh:
Take USB500's works for example. His own stories are completely self-contained and only sports other people's OC's in an AU setting.
Heck, I'm using three different timelines/alternate universes with Aurion. All of which have little to no connection with each other!:eyespin: The current ones I'm working right now is GenerationS, which is a fanfictional continuation to StrikerS which focuses on Hayate = other OC's I made. The other is the GuardianS saga, which takes place five years after StrikerS and just so happens to include my OC, thus I write stories on it based on my OC's perspective.
I think the best solution for situations like that would to have a multi-author spoiler tag as well on the front page. If the authors can find the post in order then I can simply link "Chapter 1, chapter 2, chapter 3, ect." like normal and add in an extra thing like
Story title:
Authors: Kha, Nighty, Keroko (and make each name clickable to lead to their profile)
Summary:
Links:
Or also, don't you guys tag your works in AU years? Liiiike "AS 075" was the storyline where Nanoha died, and I wrote the story about Yuuno and Fate's first time together ( the one Fate got pregnant in). If that's the case, we could add that in as well.
I think we should tag OC stories as "OC" in the genre section (genre: Action/adventure, Romance, Original Characters) that way people will know which stories revolve around the author's characters and which ones don't.
I like the idea.:nod: Though I must point out that currently active joint works aren't really that several right now.:heh: The one who seem to be doing a proper co-op authoring right now are Wild Goose and Kagerou. While I'm just a support-author for PheonixFlare's GuardianS.
An OC section sounds nice.:D Once there are enough OC works present here, we can finally break out that section.:D Of course, we'll be glad to help out the best we could in arranging the formatted links as well to make your job easier.:D
This feels a bit off-topic:uhoh:, so I'll keep low-key for now while still working on proper FF-section material.:heh:
Let's get back on topic!
Her eyes watched Fate go to said closet and root through it. “Hm... I can't really wear this lingerie under a work uniform... I'll have to lose my garter and stockings. Can I borrow some socks too?”
“Sure, in my bottom dresser drawer.” Fate plucked a shirt and looked at it, pondering on if it would look good on her friend or not. After a few seconds of silence Nanoha's shocked gasp made her turn around. “What is it-oh!” A hand went to her mouth when she saw Nanoha holding a certain object in her hands that she kept hidden in her drawer.
“Wow, Fate-chan!” Nanoha had a smile that would make even the Cheshire Cat envious. “How did you get one of these!?”
“I'm going to die,” Fate covered her face with both hands. “That is...”
“I know what it is,” Nanoha teased. “I want to know how you got it.”
What is it? It could be an imported Mexican jumping bean. Knowing me and my play on words... Think what you will. :heh:
ghazghkull
2008-01-13, 02:35
*Keels over from the sudden idea that came to mind*
If it's what I think it is...Oh god I'm going to suffer from major blood loss LOL XD
*Keels over from the sudden idea that came to mind*
If it's what I think it is...Oh god I'm going to suffer from major blood loss LOL XD
:heh: I think I know what it is too... *coughstartswithacertainletterdcough* unless its like a really old collectible plush toy of sorts or some fad which brings up nostalgic memories :p You know, like beanie babies! Rare collectibles which are all the rage one moment and then embarrassments years later which you tried to hide! :heh:
*in a dark, silent room...*
Furby: "Feeeeed meeee" :uhoh::eyespin:
SpaceBrotha
2008-01-13, 02:47
Well... Actually that project is in indefinite hiatus. :-/ :heh:
I'm not even sure if I'll continue it anymore!:eyespin::heh::upset:
:upset:
That's a feasible solution indeed.:) But the problem is not everything in the OC thread is connected.:heh: So that single fu*k off fiction is gonna get turned into a frickin large list of fu*k off fictionS...:uhoh::heh:
Take USB500's works for example. His own stories are completely self-contained and only sports other people's OC's in an AU setting.
Heck, I'm using three different timelines/alternate universes with Aurion. All of which have little to no connection with each other!:eyespin: The current ones I'm working right now is GenerationS, which is a fanfictional continuation to StrikerS which focuses on Hayate = other OC's I made. The other is the GuardianS saga, which takes place five years after StrikerS and just so happens to include my OC, thus I write stories on it based on my OC's perspective.
Well, we could use the OC timeline you guys have, and compile a single story around that timeline, perhaps using nightengales saga of saga and before saga as the official history... just by doing that we'd have a story of epic proportions, and something very worth everyones time reading :D
What is it? It could be an imported Mexican jumping bean. Knowing me and my play on words... Think what you will. :heh:
a cosplay costume?
Edit: then again, it IS an object, not a piece of cloth... leaving out the obvious sexual things that could be there (porn mags to toys)... dunno, nekomimi is one option i suppose :p
Here's a hint, the object she found starts with a "V" also has an "B" "E" "T" "R" "A" in it as well.
edit: page claim!
SpaceBrotha
2008-01-13, 02:59
Here's a hint, the object she found starts with a "V" also has an "A" "T" "R" in it as well.
edit: page claim!
i was trying to figure out all the things it could be if you disregard the obvious sexual things that would still prompt that reaction from both of them... :eyespin:
now i need something that rhymes with vibrator... :p
edit: She added letters to the hint while i was writing!
edit 2: so, anything that rhymes with vibrating egg then? :p
ghazghkull
2008-01-13, 03:07
:eek:
*keels over from the sudden influx of ideas*
I was talking about Velvet the Black Panther
http://www.amazon.com/Beanie-Babies-Velvet-Black-Panther/dp/B00001QEDK
pervs
SpaceBrotha
2008-01-13, 03:24
I was talking about Velvet the Black Panther
http://www.amazon.com/Beanie-Babies-Velvet-Black-Panther/dp/B00001QEDK
pervs
There's endless fun in perversion, hence i stay a pervert... :D
...and i don't really want to hear about pervs from the person who's fics have a nanoha who's the horniest bunny in the entire bloody universe...
...and i wonder what fate found in the drawer she shares with nanoha back in 6th div when she lost her memory, eh? ;)
ghazghkull
2008-01-13, 03:24
*keels over anyways from the cuteness*
I was talking about Velvet the Black Panther
http://www.amazon.com/Beanie-Babies-Velvet-Black-Panther/dp/B00001QEDK
pervs
Oh?!? ;) So I was right. :heh: If it was something sexual...well :rolleyes: the possibilities are endless. :eyespin:
There's endless fun in perversion, hence i stay a pervert... :D
...and i don't really want to hear about pervs from the person who's fics have a nanoha who's the horniest bunny in the entire bloody universe...
...and i wonder what fate found in the drawer she shares with nanoha back in 6th div when she lost her memory, eh? ;)
Now that was their secret toy box :3
Oh?!? ;) So I was right. :heh: If it was something sexual...well :rolleyes: the possibilities are endless. :eyespin:
It still could be, but I didn't want too much NSFW stuff to pop up so I made up the beanie baby :P
Anyway, I'll try and have chapter VI done tomorrow (today). Depends on if any people need their stuff archived and WoW raids. But I'm hoping to get this chapter done 'casue I think it'll be a good one.
ghazghkull
2008-01-13, 03:42
lol You think? YOU THINK?!!!
C'MON GET WITH THE PROGRAM HERE!!! YOU ALREADY GAVE US THIS MUCH! WHAT MAKES YOU THINK IT ISN'T GOING TO DO SPECTACULAR?!!! XD
Aaron008R
2008-01-13, 08:14
Ugyahhh!:eyespin: I might as well post the story now!:eyespin:
This story is my own continuation of StrikerS. As such, it has a slightly unhealthy dosage of OC's. But, I whipped up a simplified version of my OC's profile for easier reading.
The canon characters to be involved are:
Main Story:
Yagami Hayate
Signum
Vita
Rein
Shamal
Agito
Zafira
Later Arcs:
Chrono Harlaown
Fate Testarossa Harlaown
Bit Parts:
Takamachi Nanoha (Sorry. But she shouldn't be forcing herself after that battle in StrikerS.)
Verossa Acous
Vivio Takamachi
Yuuno Scrya
OC Cast:
Aurion Dauer (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1448376&postcount=21782), Part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1448379&postcount=21783)
Tesla (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=987123&postcount=1562)
Grandis Lacetti (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1592979&postcount=24396) (I'll put the profiles later)
Luozorl von Mazda
Lyriel el Mazda
+more later
While not absolutely necessary, I heavily suggest that one should read Aurion's FF-universe simplified profile. Oh, and Tesla's and Keroko's as well.:) If not, the reader might become confused with why Aurion is known to the other Canon Characters here and why is there a fifth Wolkenritter.:heh:
Oh, and by the way, I'll be using a bit of moonspeak in my works so here's a little handy (and hopefully accurate:heh:) translation guide.:)
Oji-chan = an affectionate way of saying 'uncle'
Onii-chan = Big brother
Uruseyo = colloquialized 'urusai yo', which means 'shut up'
Ossan = Old man
Dame ya = 'You can't'. It should be 'Dame da', but since Hayate speaks kansai-ben, 'da' become 'ya'.
Zettai dame! = Absolutely don't!
Konbanwa = Good evening
Chuu = Kiss
Hai = Yes
-jiisan = shortened 'Ojii-san', which means Grandfather/Gramps
Hakase = Professor/Doctor
Here I go!:mad:
Part 1...
~Prologue~
[Caveat Valley, Synthedonia: Planet Duraxyll 2] [May 30th, MC 077] [Early morning]
It’s still as beautiful as ever…
A lone figure can be seen standing on a barren field. Upon closer inspection, he is revealed to be looking at what seems to be the planet’s moon at first glance.
Even after what happened…
However, this is not the case as the celestial body this person is looking at is in fact the sister planet of the one he is currently in…
“Tche.” The person leaps down from his high perch, landing lightly on the ground. The wind blows, scattering his black hair and making his cloak billow. Azure, melancholic eyes scans the landscape he is currently in; noting the absence of any other form of life other than plants and the occasional small animal…
And just as they told me… It seems like the inhabitants of this planet weren’t left much choice of the matter either. Heh… Must have been troublesome…
“Hm?”
A data screen appears beside the person, showing the face of a beautiful young girl no older than 14 in appearance. Her long and shiny silver hair contrasted well with her deep, emerald eyes. She spoke with a charming lilt to her tone, “Grandis onii-chan.”
The person called Grandis turned to face the caller, showing a small smile in reply, “Lyriel,” he called the girl, “what is it?”
The girl smiled back, “Luozorl-sama is calling for everyone.” Her tone gained a light note of severity, “‘It’ will start soon…”
“I see…” is his reply, “Please tell them that I’ll be there shortly. Thank you, Lyriel.” He then smiles one more time at the girl and faces away, his feet starting to take short strides towards his destination.
“Hai.” The data screen vanishes.
“Heh. At last, huh?” Grandis sighs lightly, looks up into Duraxyll, his former home planet and raises his hand as if to grasp it, “Rest easy… For I will end it soon… Until then,” He clenches his upraised hand tightly, his blue eyes turning icy with cold fury, “I will not rest until I’ve avenged you…”
And only by doing so… My time can flow again…
~~~~~~~~~~~~~
~MGLN: GenerationS: Chapter One – Beginning~
[Meeting Room, TSAB Naval Base] [May 23rd, MC 077] [1030 hours]
Eight individuals can be seen gathered and sitting on the three benches in the room. Small chatter can be heard from them. Two small flashes of blue and red light can be seen zipping around the room, later revealed to be two six-inch tall minute girls.
“But really!” complained a red-haired child of around seven years old. But in fact, this little girl has already existed for several hundred years. Her name is Vita, the Iron Knight of the Wolkenritter, former components of the Book of Darkness, now the loyal guardians of the Mistress of the Night Sky. “Why do we have to work with that old man again?”
“Maa, maa~, Vita-chan…” replied a motherly-looking blond woman. Her name is Shamal, the Knight of the Lake. “It’s not like he would be causing us any trouble during the mission.”
“But still,” Vita replied, “Couldn’t we just get anybody else? Yes, we’ve already known him for ten years already but I still don’t like him!”
“Vita…” interjected another woman who had her long, pink hair in a ponytail. She is the leader of the Wolkenritter, the Sword Knight/Blazing Flame General, Signum. “As much as you may not like a person, we are not allowed to be picky about who are to be assigned alongside us in our missions.”
“Hmph!” the small Knight didn’t reply and just reclined back to the bench with her arms behind her head.
“But what is all this fuss about?” inquired the small red blur, stopping beside Signum’s head, floating up and down with her wings flapping gently. This is Agito, Signum’s Unison Device, and the newest unofficial addition to the Wolkenritter. “While I understand that there’s something positively fishy about that old guy with the fake arm from the few times I met him, I don’t really get what’s there to hate.”
“There’s not really anything to hate, desuyo~.” piped in the other small blur, stopping and plopping on Vita’s head. Her name is Reinforce Zwei, better known as Rein. She is the Unison Device of the Mistress of the Night Sky. She is also arguably the Wolkenritter’s sole mascot until recently, “Vita-chan just never took a liking to him.”
“Uruseyo.” Vita replied lazily while looking up at the little (literally) girl freeloading on her head. “Like you should talk. You’re still scared of him at times, right?”
As Rein’s vehement protests followed, a giggle resounds from the blue-haired girl beside Shamal, her sharp and calculative eyes switches from azure wolf, Zafira, the Guardian Beast of the Wolkenritter, whose hair she is currently grooming to Agito with an amused gaze. She is Tesla, the Knight of the Sky, tactician of the Wolkenritter. “Looks like we’ll get to know if Agito will end up liking or hating Ossan during this mission.”
“Hmm…” Agito crosses her arms and legs as she lands to sit on Signum’s shoulder. “I guess I’ll be the judge then…”
The idle chatter continued, as well as Agito and Rein’s little game of aerial tag. Shamal stood up after a few more minutes and approached the other person in the room who’s currently gazing out of the window into space. “Hayate-chan. How come you’re being so quiet all of the sudden?”
“Hmm?” the girl in question turned around and gazed inquisitively at Shamal. Her charming face framed by shoulder-length brown hair with a red cross-clip and two yellow clips on the left side. The Mistress of the Night Sky, Yagami Hayate; a silent and caring young woman who was the chosen host of one of the most fearsome Lost Logia TSAB has ever known, the Book of Darkness, twelve years ago. But after a long string of events, she is now a TSAB Special Investigator and a veritable celebrity in her own right; being the creator and leader of the now-defunct miracle unit, ‘Riot Force Six’ which was well-renowned for being the major force in solving the ‘Jail Scaglietti Incident’ just a year ago. “It’s nothing, Shamal.” Hayate says softly and then smiles lightly.
“Hayate~chan.” Shamal brings her face closer to Hayate’s with a convincing motherly glare, “Don’t tell me you’re being depressed again?”
Hayate’s expression changed to mock apprehension as she playfully shrunk away from Shamal, “O-of course not, Shamal-sensei! Let’s just say I’m excited about being able to work with Oji-chan in this mission.” She then giggled lightheartedly, prompting Shamal to do the same.
“Excited, eh? Well, you should be.” echoes a deep male voice from beside Hayate. At the same time, a tall man phases in like a ghost, leaning on the window directly adjacent to Hayate and Shamal.
“E-eh?” Hayate managed to blurt out as they gaped at the sudden appearance of their designated coworker. Shamal was covering her mouth in shock
Various shouts of “EH?!?” resounded at varying times within the room, almost everyone except Tesla, Signum and Zafira appeared surprised.
Vita, who almost fell out of the bench, quickly scrambled up and pointed a finger at the new arrival, positively fuming, “TEME! Damn you old man and your flashy entrances!”
“What flashy entrance?” the man asked innocently and then pointing at the sliding door, “The door was opened so I let myself in.”
“Aurion-jiisan!” shouted a disgruntled Rein, “You didn’t have to surprise us, desu~!”
The man called Aurion only chuckled and straightened up, “Okay, okay. Sorry about that. It’s just that I missed you people.”
“S-Signum!” a flabbergasted Agito exclaimed as she floated shakily beside her partner’s head, “I guess I now know one of the reasons why Vita dislikes him!”
“Oji-chan!” Hayate cried out while glaring at her ‘uncle’, clearly not amused.
“Yo, Hayate.” Aurion cheerfully replies with a raised hand.
“Mou~! Do you have to do something like this every time we meet?!” And thus began a semi-long scolding from Hayate (with Rein joining in almost immediately) as Shamal shot the three unsurprised individuals doubtful glares.
As it is, Tesla was clearly not bothering to hide her amusement as she was already giggling so hard she had to muffle her laughter in Zafira’s thick fur (Zafira’s ears were twitching impatiently with Tesla’s actions). Signum arms and legs were crossed and her eyes were closed calmly all this time, but an amused smile later played along her lips as she opened one eye to glance at Vita, Agito and then Shamal, ‘What? Didn’t you three sense him?’ she inquired telepathically over the audible exchange of words currently occurring at the edge of the room. ‘Dauer isn’t exactly hard to track down once you’ve gotten used to his various exploits.’
‘Tche.’ Vita grumbled mentally, ‘I just let my guard down, that’s all.’
‘But still!’ Shamal complained exasperatedly, ‘You should have at least warned us!’
‘I never saw the need to.’ Zafira cut in just as he managed to detach himself from Tesla who was messing up his hair, ‘I sensed no ill intent. So the warning wasn’t really necessary.’
‘Sou, sou!’ followed up a slightly breathless Tesla, at the same time grabbing Zafira around neck and yanking him towards herself again (earning a choked grunt from the Guardian Beast) and started stroking his messed fur to straighten them out. ‘Besides,’ she glanced cheerfully at Hayate’s direction, ‘I think this is how Hayate-chan wanted things to go.’
‘Eh?’ Agito followed Tesla’s line of sight towards Hayate, Aurion and Rein’s direction. As it was, Hayate is already laughing happily as her head was being patted by the elderly man. ‘Well… I’ve seen Hayate-san as cheerful as this before, but she now seems different somehow… but why?’
‘Why indeed?’ Signum's smile widened as she gazed contentedly at their laughing Mistress.
‘Hmph. If it’s for Hayate’s sake…’ Vita reclined back at the bench, ‘I guess I could let this slip.’
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[Admiral’s Office, XV Class Warship Claudia] [May 23rd, MC 081] [1030 hours]
*tap tap tap*
This is the only audible sound in the lightly decorated room. The solitary person in the Admiral’s table is in the midst of browsing a dauntingly high amount of data screens in front of him. His fingers flew like flashes of lightning across the keyboard as his green eyes moves almost just as quickly over the several details in all the current reports regarding several matters in the TSAB chain of command. After a few more moments of almost non-stop activity, he impatiently smacks the table lightly with both his hands with an exasperated sigh as he leans back closes his eyes. His right hand rises up to hold the spot between his eyes, his eyelids twitching with stress due to long days of incessant deskwork. A part of him sorely misses working in the field alone or alongside the Aces instead of toiling away endlessly at this seemingly infinite pile of paperwork, and he is currently using up an unnecessarily high amount of willpower just trying to resist the impulse of leaving the desk, grabbing Durandal and going against any available mage or group of mages in a mock battle to lighten up his stress.
Chrono Harlaown, one of the youngest and most famous Admirals ever produced in the history of the TSAB. Unfortunately, his youth and prestige isn’t exactly helping him in his share of documents and files to plow through. If anything, it seems to be aggravating his already cramped work schedule. His hand automatically sought out the cup of coffee beside the documents on his table. Taking a long drink and almost emptying the cup in the process, he returns it on the small plate and thinks back on the recent events.
The Jail Scaglietti Incident certainly sent the entire TSAB command structure reeling from the losses. On top of the several follow-up investigations with anything that might have been left behind by the mad scientist and even inside the Bureau’s capital structure was currently taking up an extremely large portion of the entire TSAB’s Intelligence force. And by the speed things were progressing, he wasn’t satisfied at all. He secretly wished for anything else to happen just to stay away from the paperwork just a little longer. Anything!
And as if reacting to his half-hearted mental pleas, a communication screen opens beside him, bearing the identification of his best friend, Head Investigator Verossa Acous. Chrono had reservations about whether to be thankful or mad about the caller being Verossa or not. He tentatively chose the first option and received the call by pressing the ‘Receive’ button on the data screen.
“Yo, Chrono-kun!” greeted the green-haired man in his customary good cheer, “It seems like today is another fine day to unveil the hidden treasures inside the mountains of documents, isn’t it?”
“Verossa.” He greeted casually, “If there were indeed hidden treasures inside the mountains of backlog here, I’d have long hit pay dirt, retired from being an Admiral and would be relaxing with the rest of my family in a vacation planet far, far away from the TSAB and its affairs.”
“Hahahaha!” laughed the inspector, “Really now, Chrono. Can’t you take a joke?”
“Not now, mind you. Anyway, what business do you have with me? I’m busy.”
“Oh, nothing much. Just some extra reports regarding the results of the extra investigations facilitated by myself and the Saint Church.”
More work?! Chrono bit back on an exasperated groan and took a deep breath before replying, “Okay, thanks. Anything else?”
“My, my. Snappish aren’t we?”
“Don’t waste my time, Verossa. I’m trying to finish as much as I can today.”
“Haha! Sorry, sorry. I was just hoping for a little chat about Hayate.”
At this point, a spark of interest glinted in Chrono’s eyes, “What about Hayate?”
An enigmatic smile appeared on the lips of the man on the screen, “I’ve had a talk with her recently. It seems like she’ll be having some fun with her next mission.”
“Aah.” Chrono nodded, “So I’ve heard. Hayate and her group are going to be working with Magitech Weapon Researcher Aurion Dauer. Needless to say, things are never dull with that person around.”
“So I’ve heard from her stories about him.” Verossa smiled wider. “I must admit, the situation couldn’t have been better. It’s been a while since I’ve seen Hayate this excited about any operation.”
“That should come as no surprise.” Chrono replied as he rested his chin on his fist, “The same would apply for any of the other three Aces as well. I don’t know how, but those four have already grown an unusual sort of attachment for that man over these past ten years.”
“Amazingly so.” nodded Verossa, “It’s actually quite a mystery to Carym and myself. If anything, he is the only person I know that Hayate and her friends all have such an affectionate nickname for. Oji-chan, was it?” He grasped his chest in a mock grimace of pain, “It has finally come to the point that it sometimes even makes me jealous. Hayate never calls me Onii-chan even once.”
Chrono smirked, “Those are two different things. And I don’t see that happening anytime soon. Anyway, that’s not the sort of topic we’re supposed to be talking about. So quit it because you’re creeping me out.”
“Ahh, such ignorance for a friend’s feelings.” continued the green-haired inspector melodramatically, lightly holding his head with his right hand, “You have Fate-san calling you that as well, don’t you? What is there to blame on a big brother who just wants to be called as such by his cute little sister?”
Eyebrows twitching with the mention of Fate’s little habit, Chrono retorted with light vehemence, “Maybe that’s exactly why Hayate’s not addressing you that way.” mirth slowly crept into his tone, “With that creepy way you’re acting, I’d rather let the Aces stay with Aurion-hakase for a year rather than one day with you.”
“Ah, such cruel words!” His friend replied dejectedly. “Anyway, jokes aside, judging from Aurion-san’s track record, this is the best possible arrangement for Hayate right now.”
“Yeah…” Chrono replied thoughtfully, “If there’s anybody who knows how to talk some sense into people, or otherwise encouraging them, it’s him.” He smiled as memories came flooding into his mind. “Not just Hayate. Fate, Keroko, and of course… No. Not just.” one particular scene with the auburn-haired Ace covered in bandages came into his mind, “Especially Nanoha.”
“I see…” replied Acous just as thoughtfully. “In this case, the one with the most recent problem is Hayate, is it not?”
“Yeah.” Chrono’s expression turned serious, “I did not expect it, but she seems to be the one having the worst time when reminiscing about the term of RF6… Physically, Keroko's deteriorated condition due to the Blaster System is the worst thing that happened to them. But when it comes to morale, Hayate’s self-esteem took the biggest blow…”
“Despite myself, I couldn’t really blame her…” Acous replied with a serious expression to match that of Chrono’s, “If it was me, I’d most likely feel left out as well. While I completely disagree with Hayate’s claims that she wasn’t able to do anything, I couldn’t contend to the fact that she was severely tied down during her term as a leader when it came to fighting. And her tenure as a squad leader wasn’t exactly smooth-sailing all the way either.”
Catching on, Chrono continued on Acous’ monologue, “And with the earlier losses in Ground Command that lead to the Cradle’s resurrection due to insufficient planning, Nanoha and Keroko’s worsened conditions after the battle, and several other things, particularly being the one who’ve arguably done the least compared to everyone else during the final battle; and later on actually being another one who needed to be rescued in the end despite being one of the most capable at that time…” he shook his head dismally, “It’s no mystery she’d be feeling inadequate about herself. Being an Ace and a leader, she naturally would have wished she could have done far more than she was able to at that time.”
“True. She talked over the matter with Genya Nakajima-san… with me as well. Simply put, I think she’s afraid of leading again; with all the complications in her first unit alongside her terribly hurt sense of worth.” Acous smiled grimly “But regrettably, in my case, all I was able to give her was momentary comfort.” he chuckled ruefully, “Nakajima-san gave some sound career advice. And Aurion-san tackled the matter better than I could ever have regarding her doubts.”
“Heh.” Chrono remembered a particular conversation, smiling amusedly, “That man… He actually told me how he did it.”
“Hoh?”
“It was like this…” Chrono coughed and tried imitating Aurion’s voice, “The problem with what you’ve been doing is you’re making her depend on you. Don’t just give encouragement and words of comfort. Attack the problem itself! If it requires you to actually agree with their misgivings, provided that there’s truth to them, then do so. Just make sure you can later make them see the way out of their own problem in the end.”
“Oho~… quite an unorthodox method indeed... Though not exactly unheard of...”
“Yes.” Chrono chuckled, “I rarely try it because I fear I might make the people I’m trying to cheer up feel worse and be completely convinced about their failure. But apparently, that man has the necessary audacity and precision to actually stir up a person doubts and turn it upon itself with such a high rating of success; with only minimal use of any positive lines on top of that. In Hayate’s case, if we were saying, ‘It’s alright, you did well. And I’m sure you can do better in the future. We’re always behind you in this.’ for him, its, ‘Fine, you were horrible! Both as a leader and a mage; but at least you’re not hopeless. Now stop wasting time moping about your problem and do something about it instead!’ only executed several times better.” he shrugs, “From what I’ve seen, I guess that sometimes, a person wants somebody to agree with them in their unease. People offering only encouragement only serve to soothe the pain temporarily and does not help in easing their self-doubt, and even sometimes aggravates it. But once someone actually does so without pushing it too far and cementing the doubt, it helps in opening their mind in matters involving moving forward. And naturally, that person would listen to the one who agreed with them because of the perception of being in the same wavelength. Of course, this doesn’t apply to everybody.”
“I see… Amazing…” Acous smiles and strokes his chin, “Impressive discussion of that effective method, Chrono.”
“Risky as well. But I guess that’s why Aurion-hakase is the only one who uses such a method on an almost regular basis.”
“But it paid off. Carym and I can attest to that. We saw a new, stronger determination within Hayate after that supposed meeting. Carym was delighted that someone did that for our little sister out of the goodness of his heart.”
Chrono smiled widely, “Ah, but that might actually be not the case.”
“Eh?”
“Aurion-hakase said so himself. He’s just a person with too much time in his hands and has nothing better to do than intruding in other peoples lives as he sees fit.”
“Oh, hahaha, souka! An unexpectedly beneficial meddler, huh?”
“Right, hahahaha!”
Both of them laughed heartily for a few moments
“Anyway,” Chrono spoke up, still chuckling, “How’s Hayate been doing lately?” It has been a recent arrangement lately that Chrono would keep tabs on Fate and Keroko since they are both in the Navy. And on the other side, Verossa would keep an eye on Hayate, who’s also a key associate of the Saint Church; and Nanoha, who has Vivio, her adopted daughter attending school there.
“Ah,” Acous dropped his fist onto his palm, “She’s been progressing amazingly well.” He held his right elbow with his left hand and held his chin with his right. “While not unbelievably quick, her improvements in her abilities, both in combat and in the tactical sense have been steadily improving by the day. Our dearest little sister is quickly growing up to become a very capable lady!”
Chrono didn’t understand why, but an image of Hayate in her Barrier Jacket striking a pose with some extravagant background as well as the letters SSS+ beside her appeared in his mind. Shaking off the absurd vision from his mind, he said, “That’s fine and all. But at least make sure that she’s not overdoing it.”
“No need to worry about that, Chrono my friend.” Comes the reply, “She’s been listening to what Carym, you and I have been telling her about not letting her feelings about doing things take her too far. She’s very meticulous about it. Hehehe… You should have seen her determined face during one particular exercise she was having a hard time in. She looked incredibly cute by then!”
“Oh really?”
“Why yes! You can actually use her pictures to easily bribe people who have a soft spot for cuties like her!”
“…………”
“What?”
“Oi, can it be… Don’t tell me you have pictures of her stashed somewhere for bribing.”
“Ahahaha! What are you talking about? I do have pictures of her, yes. But not for bribing!”
Chrono planted his face on the palm of his hand and heaved an exasperated sigh. “Verossa, if it was a person other than you, I might have already called in my personal Enforcer Squad to track down and detain the stalker of one of my Aces…”
Acous only laughed cheerfully as he waved a hand dismissively, “Please don’t turn my words around, Chrono-kun. That’s not what I meant. You should know that!”
“I’d believe you completely if it weren’t for your tone…”
“Hahahaha! Anyway, you sounded rather possessive as well. ‘MY Aces’, eh?”
Chrono didn’t take the bait and replied nonchalantly, “Well, aren’t they under my care after all?”
“Indeed. And speaking of being under your care, it seems like you were one of the people who vouched for that personnel arrangement, eh, Chrono?”
Chrono’s hand, about to reach for his cup, stopped midway, “Whatever could you be talking about?”
“No need to hide it, Chrono-kun.” Acous waved his hand to and fro, “As expected from the Aces’ big brother. Always looking out after them, eh?”
“Heh.” Chrono grinned as he went ahead and drank the rest of his coffee, “Busted.”
“Should I tell Hayate?”
“Nah. She’d probably guess, anyway.”
“I’m guessing this is for a little confidence boost, huh?”
“Exactly.” Chrono affirmed while setting his cup down, “Just like you said, she’s on the fast track to getting over her insecurities. And with this coming mission having a high probability of risk, having Aurion-hakase along can also provide for extra hands in combat when needed. The setup is just right.”
Acous nodded approvingly, “Heh~, I wish I could also make these kinds of arrangements for Hayate as well…”
Chrono only smirked and chided his best friend, “Leave the arrangements to me and focus on your job, Inspector.”
“I know, I know!” Acous dramatically raised his hands in defeat, “I have to thank you, though. This will most certainly have Hayate burning passionately with enthusiasm in her dreams for the future.”
“That she should. I told you before, haven’t I?” Chrono leaned back to his seat and glanced at the picture besides the one of Fate, Arf, Lindy, Amy and his two children, Makoto and Ai alongside him; a picture showing the four Aces, himself, Carym, Acous and Yuuno. Fate was on the left side, sitting on the grass with Chrono crouched beside her as well as having an arm around her shoulders. Yuuno was sandwiched between Nanoha and Keroko who were both clinging to one of his arms each while sitting down together on the right side. Little Vivio was also sitting in between the two Takamachi’s and leaning on Yuuno. His gaze lingered longest on Hayate, who was on her feet with her hands on her knees at the center, smiling brightly; with Carym and Verossa standing behind her as well as having a hand each on her shoulders. Rein was also floating beside her head. A nostalgic smile crept up his mouth as he remembered that scene, “If the Aces are the torches that will light up the path to the future, then I consider it my duty to keep them burning brightly and never waver.” he looked back at the screen, “That’s why, one way or another, they’re still under my care up to this time, right?”
“Hm-hm! Like I said. The Aces’ reliable Onii-chan, eh?”
“Hehe… I guess I really do act like the part, huh?”
“Indeed. And also a big brother who’s currently buried in deskwork.” Acous reminded teasingly.
Chrono grimaced upon the reminder, “Ugh. Thanks for reminding me.”
“Hahaha! The pleasure is all mine. Dewa, I’ll be taking my leave, Chrono.”
“Aah. Later.” Chrono saluted once, with Verossa returning the salute and logging out the communications screen. With a resigned sigh, Chrono turned back resolutely to his quickly mounting pile of paperwork. “All right then… Back to work…”
Just as he was about to begin typing, a knock sounded at the door to his office. Chrono just sighed and called out, “Come in!”
“Please excuse me…” a tall, ruby-eyed girl entered; her long blond hair swishing as she stood before Chrono.
A smile crept up Chrono’s face upon seeing who entered. It was Fate Testarossa Harlaown, his adopted sister.
Fate stood up straight and saluted. “Enforcer Fate T. Harlaown, reporting for duty, Admiral Chrono.”
“At ease.” He replied almost immediately.
And almost just as quickly, Fate lightened her stance to a more relaxed one. A gentle smile replaced her professional expression earlier.
“Fate.” Chrono said, smiling and gesturing his sister to come closer and take a seat on one of the chairs in front of his table. “What brings you here?”
“Well,” Fate walked towards and sat on one of the chairs, “Onii-chan, I-”
Chrono visibly flinched and made a small sound at the title, unintentionally cutting of Fate’s words, “Guzen dayo na? (This is a coincidence, right?)” he whispered to himself as her planted his face on his palm for a few seconds.
“Ano, Onii-chan?”
“Fate.” Chrono started, actually blushing lightly, “I’ve told you before, cut that out. We’re no longer kids.”
“And I’ve told you before,” Fate replied lightheartedly, “That has nothing to do with us being siblings, Chrono.”
Brushing off the feeling of déjà vu, Chrono asks, “Back on topic… So Fate, what brings you here?”
“Ah, that. I came to bring in some more reports about the latest cases for the several Enforcer Squads…”
Chrono couldn’t hold it this time and sighed heavily (Hey, at least it’s only Fate around), “More work for me, I guess…”
“Sorry…” Fate apologized soothingly.
Chrono waved a hand, “It’s alright. It just gets pretty tedious. It’s been several days with just this to do…”
“I see…” The two of them spent the following few moments in silence. Then suddenly, Fate’s expression suddenly brightened up as an idea hit her mind, “Ne, Onii-chan!”
Flinch! (From Chrono) “Geh! Fate-”
“Let’s have a short sparring match together.”
“Eh?”
“Come on, just for thirty minutes.” Fate said enthusiastically as she got up and went behind Chrono’s chair; beginning to push her brother from behind the shoulders.
Chrono began frantically dissuading his sister, “Wait a second, Fate! I still have plenty of work to-whoa!”
“It’s alright,” Fate insisted as she got him to stand up and began pushing him towards the door, “I’m free today so I can help you later.”
After a few more minutes of arguing, Chrono gave in to Fate insistences, “Oh well…” he pats Fate’s shoulder warmly, “You have my thanks for rescuing me from the excessive workload, Fate. But,” He grabbed Durandal’s card form from the table, grinning, “don’t expect me to go easy on you.”
Fate smiled softly yet confidently in reply as she held Bardiche’s portable form in front of her face, “No problem. And I’ll make sure to beat you this time, Chrono.”
“Don’t bet on it.”
The two of them laughed as they left the room, only receding sounds of their conversation can be heard…
“I heard Hayate and the others are going with Aurion-san on a mission…”
“Yes, that’s true.”
“Ahh… I want to go too!”
“Hahaha! I knew you would say that!”
And with regards to the mock battle that occurred later, who actually won is a story for another day…
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[School Park Area, Saint Church] [May 24th, MC 077] [1543 hours]
Two people are sitting on a bench. The first is Hayate, who had Vivio, the Ace of Aces Takamachi Nanoha’s adopted daughter on her lap. She was currently reading a book which was several years ahead of Vivio’s school level along with the said girl. (A testament to Vivio’s high natural intellect)
“Hayate-san,” piped the small girl, “How do you pronounce this part?” while pointing at a particular part on the page they were reading.
“Oh this? It goes like…”
A few more minutes pass until a call can be heard.
“Vivio~! Hayate-chan~!” echoed a youthful female voice, its owner fast approaching. Takamachi Nanoha; also known as the Ace of Aces and a pivotal role in the resolution of the Jail Scaglietti incident a year ago. Her long, auburn hair held in a side-ponytail billowed in the air as she quickly came running towards Hayate and Vivio’s location.
The little girl instantly perked up upon hearing her mother’s voice. Quickly thanking Hayate, she jumped of the older girl’s lap and dashed towards her mother. “Mama~!” she called out in reply, later ending up snuggling in Nanoha’s embrace.
“Vivio~.” Nanoha cooed affectionately as mother and daughter rubbed their noses together. “Have you been a good girl today?”
“Hm!” Vivio nodded cheerfully before once again wrapping her arms around Nanoha’s neck in another embrace. “Hayate-san was teaching me several new words!”
“Really? That’s good!” Nanoha replied, gazing at the slowly approaching Hayate. “Hayate-chan. Thank you for looking after Vivio before I arrived.” She then smiles brightly.
Hayate smiled warmly in reply, “It’s no problem. I just happened to finish the arrangements ahead of time and am just waiting until I’m called back to base.”
“So I’ve heard.” Nanoha replied. The two of them sat down on the benches, “I heard you’re going in a mission with Aurion oji-chan.”
“Yes, we are. Along with my Knights.” Hayate affirmed with an enthusiastic nod.
“Hmm~…” Nanoha hummed as she reclined on the bench and watched Vivio chase after a butterfly. “Mou~, I want to go too!” she suddenly whined cutely after several seconds of silence, pouting jealously at Hayate’s direction. “Oji-chan rarely ever goes out in missions because of his job. And it’s even rarer that any of us gets the chance to come along. I just know it’s going to be very interesting! How come Hayate-chan and Vita-tachi are the only ones who can join?”
Hayate could only giggle at one of her best friends’ endearing complaints. “Dame ya~, Nanoha-chan.” She scolded her teasingly, “Besides, it should be quite dangerous. We can’t have you pushing yourself again.”
Nanoha sighed unhappily, her shoulders slumped, “Hai…”
Hayate almost said some more to tease Nanoha, but she paused before even speaking. Her smile left her face to reveal a solemn line on her lips. She looked down on her hands on her lap. “Ano na, Nanoha-chan…”
Nanoha’s expression showed surprise as she glanced sideways at her friend, “What is it, Hayate-chan?”
“I know it must be hard…” Hayate’s hands balled into fists on her lap, wrinkling her skirt in the process. “You shouldn’t even be going thru this… If only I went in sooner… You wouldn’t have had to- Ah?” she blinked in surprise as Nanoha’s hands settled on top of hers.
“Hayate-chan.” said Nanoha in a serious tone, “We’ve already talked about this in the past, right? The situation was really out of control. And besides, I don’t have any regrets for what happened.” She raised her left hand and closed it tightly in front of her, “We were able to protect everyone’s smiles as well as our own, haven’t we? Even if it was hard, even if I got weakened, even if it was very painful, I regret absolutely no part of it; nor do I blame any one of you for my case. It was my own fault.” followed by a reassuring smile.
“Nanoha-chan…” Hayate smiled wanly, “I know that… But still-”
“Zettai dame!” Nanoha interjected sternly, puffing out her cheeks as well. “Hayate-chan, if you begin blaming yourself for what happened, then that’s when I will genuinely become mad.”
“……” Hayate only averted her gaze.
“See here,” Nanoha moved closer so that she was sitting thigh-to-thigh with Hayate, quickly followed by wrapping both arms around the smaller girl, “I'm absolutely fine. So please, don’t take it heavily on yourself. You should also smile like the rest of us.” Her hug tightened, “And just like everyone else, you should also do your best so that Oji-chan won’t scold you when you’re already in the mission.”
“I…” Hayate sniffed lightly and rubbed the small amount of tears that built up in her eyes, “I understand.” She returned the hug while smiling, “Arigatou na, Nanoha-chan.”
“Hm~hm!”
And so, the two continued chatting as Vivio went back and was currently sleeping, using Nanoha’s lap as a pillow. Every now and then a giggle can be heard from the two.
“By the way, Hayate-chan…” Nanoha inquired, “What were you supposed to be waiting for again?”
“Oh…” Hayate, clapped her hands once as if remembering, “I almost forgot to tell you,” she faked an upset expression, “My devices were confiscated…”
“E-eh?!” Nanoha exclaimed, “Confiscated? Why?”
“Well…” Hayate smiled again, “Oji-chan is upgrading them so that I can fight better. But I currently have other things to attend to so I left them with him…”
“Ah!” Nanoha looked positively intrigued this time, “That sounds really interesting.” She then pouts cutely again, “And now you can actually get your devices upgraded. What about me, Fate-chan and Keroko-chan?!” she flails her right arm (her left was holding Vivio) indignantly, “It’s not fair!”
“Ahaha~!” Hayate raises her hands in pacifying gesture, “Don’t worry. Oji-chan did say he had plans for Raising Heart and Bardiche!” she scratches her head, “Artherion is a bit difficult, but he also has plans too…”
“But still, Hayate-chan gets her upgrade so much sooner!”
“Ehehe~…” Hayate paused for a bit, “By the way, Nanoha-chan. What are you and Vivio waiting for again? It’s almost evening.”
“Ahh.” Nanoha said as if forgetting about it. A small blush appeared on her cheeks. “Well, we’re waiting for-”
“Nanoha! Hayate!” resounded a familiar male voice, followed closely by the appearance of a ponytailed and bespectacled male around Hayate and Nanoha’s age. Yuuno Scrya; the Head Librarian of the TSAB Infinity Library and also the reason why Nanoha got introduced to the world of magic in the first place. Needless to say, the two of them were extremely close friends.
“Yuuno-kun!” exclaimed both Hayate and Nanoha simultaneously; the former with a surprised expression while the latter had a smile on her face.
And just in time, Vivio awoke from her little snooze, just as Yuuno reached them; she sat up and sleepily greeted him, “Yuuno-san, konbanwa.”
“Aah. Konbanwa, Vivio.” Yuuno greeted the small girl as he patted her head. He then turned to Nanoha, “Sorry I was late.” and then waved at Hayate, who waved back.
Nanoha shook her head, “It’s okay. Hayate-chan was here to keep us company anyway.”
“Eh? Nani, nani?” inquired Hayate, curiosity growing quickly, “Could this be…” her face suddenly lit up with excitement as her gaze shuffled around the three people with her.
“Well, Yuuno-kun said that he’ll take Vivio to that new amusement park.” Nanoha replied cheerfully with her head inclined.
“H~Hmm~…” Hayate hummed suspiciously, making Yuuno push up his glasses nervously and the mother and daughter Takamachis blink in confusion.
“Take Vivio for a trip?” Hayate began teasing them, “It sounds more like a dat-”
“N-no!” exclaimed Yuuno who was blushing with his glasses askew, “It’s just a friendly trip to an amusement park….”
“Dat-?” Vivio inquired confusedly as she rubbed her eyes.
Nanoha, also blushing, said “No, no. It’s not like that, Hayate-chan! It’s just a get-together with-AH! Vivio!” she suddenly cried out as Vivio disappeared from her side.
As it turned out, a now wide-awake Vivio was swiped away by Hayate and was now held in front of her. “Vivio-chan!” Hayate gushed out animatedly, “You should start practicing calling Yuuno-san your Yuuno-pa-MmmMPPH!” Nanoha muffled her words with her hands.
“Pa-?” Vivio asked again, inquiringly looking at Nanoha who was holding down Hayate, “Mama, what are you doing?”
“Ah, n-nothing!” Nanoha frantically replied as she tightened her hold on Hayate’s mouth with one hand and grabbed the smaller Ace’s wrists with her other, “Hayate-chan is just being naughty again.” She added, giggling nervously.
“Mmmpph! Mm~mmp~phhh~!!!” Hayate moaned indignantly as she squirmed futilely against Nanoha’s hold.
“Y-yeah!” Yuuno added as he picked up Vivio from the restrained Hayate’s lap and set her on the ground. “You go ahead and prepare for our trip, okay?”
“Hai!” Vivio nodded energetically and began running off.
Both Nanoha and Yuuno sighed as the former released Hayate from her hold. “Mou, Hayate chan! Don’t give Vivio weird ideas!” Nanoha complained.
Hayate, still giggling; only stuck out her tongue at her two flustered friends. “You don’t have to hide it, Nanoha-chan, Yuuno-kun!”
“Datte~!” Nanoha cried out, flailing her arms, “It’s not like that!”
“Hai, hai~!” Hayate responded, obviously not buying the denials. “Shouldn’t you get going?”
“Ah, right…” Nanoha knocked her own head, “I’ll follow Vivio. Mata ne, Hayate-chan.” She waved as she ran off, Hayate waved back, “At the gates, right, Yuuno-kun? Let’s go!”
“Ah.” Yuuno also moved to follow, “Huh?” Hayate was tugging his sleeve.
“Can we talk for a bit, Yuuno-kun?” Hayate spoke audibly, winking in Nanoha’s direction.
“Uh… Sure…” Yuuno glanced at Nanoha.
Nanoha paused in confusion, but then shrugged and said, “Alright. Don’t be late, Yuuno-kun~!” before running off after Vivio.
Hayate dragged him around a bit before settling behind a wall. She stood up straightly with her hands akimbo, a confident smile on her face.
Yuuno pushed up his glasses nervously, “What did you want to talk about, Hayate?”
“So you’ve finally made a first move, ne, Yuuno-kun?”
“Dakara…” Yuuno sighed, “Like we said, it’s just a-Wha?!” he jolted as Hayate’s finger was pointed directly at his nose.
“Whatever it is, you must do your best so as not to disappoint Nanoha-chan.” Hayate warned him with one eye close, her other hand rose to form an encouraging fist, “Okay?”
“Hai, hai.” Yuuno replied resignedly, patting Hayate’s head. “Do your best too. I heard you were going on a mission with Aurion-hakase. Be careful, alright?”
Hayate smiled and nodded, “Yes! Thank you, Yuuno-kun.”
“Hm.” Yuuno removed his hand from her head and waved as he turned around to go. “See you.”
Hayate allowed him to move several meters ahead before shouting, “I hope this ends with your first CHUU~!”
Yuuno completely tripped over himself.
Giggling, Hayate turned around towards her own destination.
Yes. Just like Nanoha-chan, just like Yuuno-kun… I’m going to do my best!
As one can probably tell, a large part of the focus of this story (aside from the main OC plot) is on Hayate.:D After all the excessive shafting and utter humiliation (:frustrated:) she received in StrikerS, I plan to give her some proper exposure and development here.:) (Of course, under reasonable bounds.) Part 2 to come at the next post since it can't fit.:heh: She's 21 years old here now.
Aaron008R
2008-01-13, 08:16
Part 2...
[Magic Weapons Research Facility, TSAB Naval Base] [May 24th, MC 077] [1635 hours]
Tesla is seen walking briskly towards a singular room at the end of the corridor, her long, blue hair bouncing lightly in tempo to her quick but well-measured strides. A small datapad is clutched in her right arm. As she reached the door, she raised a hand to knock, hesitated, and instead opened the door immediately and poked her head inside. “Ossan~!” she called out loudly in a lively tone.
The only person inside is Aurion, hunched over a small containment field holding the Buch der Nachthimmeis (or the Book of the Night Sky), one of Hayate’s primary devices. He didn’t show any palpable sign of being perturbed by the somewhat abrupt (more like intentionally rude) entrance of the Knight of the Sky, but his left eyebrow twitched noticeably as he paused his typing on the data screen before him.
“What are you doing?” inquired Tesla playfully, obviously paying no heed to the stalled progress.
“Oh, nothing much.” came the reply as Aurion straightened up and turned to look nonchalantly at the smaller girl. His right hand rose to poke Tesla by the forehead as he began a light scolding, “I was just on that one crucial part that might end up refragmenting all the information in the device if I screwed up.” He kept on poking Tesla’s head for every few words he stated “That would have subsequently delayed the installation by several hours. So you should be thankful that I didn’t,” He finished by raising his hand higher and patting her head rather heavily, “Tesla.”
The blue-haired girl winced first, and later giggled as she raised a hand to cover her forehead and stuck out her tongue playfully, “Sorry.”
“Ah, well. Have you got what I called for?”
“Yup. It’s right here.” Tesla answered, handing over the datapad to him.
“Thank you.” Instead of taking the datapad, Aurion turned around and began to work on the Tome again. The datapad simply got surrounded by a cobalt glow and levitated out of Tesla’s hand, floating in front of Aurion and flipping a few pages. “With this data, I should be able to do the proper recalibrations for Schwertkreuz faster…”
“You’re welcome.” Tesla replied cheerfully. “………” Clasping her hands behind her, she stepped forward and bent sideways, gazing curiously at Aurion’s face. “Hmm~,” she stared at his face for several seconds, “I guess they were right.” she mumbled thoughtfully afterwards.
Aurion ignored her first as he finished the rest of the adjustments. After finishing, he closed the several screens and willed the datapad to land on his left hand. “Nanda?” he inquired as he bent sideways himself to match the stare of the girl.
Tesla straightened up and stepped back, with Aurion following cue, “You’re eyes… They were glowing just now, huh?”
“Ah.” Aurion blinked once and smiled strangely, “It seems like they do.” he says later as his eyes begin glowing cobalt, advertently causing exactly twenty strands of hair hanging from Tesla’s shoulder the glow and float gently in front of her face. “And it also seems like it came with a certain bonus”
Tesla raised her hands to let her fingers brush with her currently ‘alive’ hair. As if reacting to the touch, the six strands braided themselves into a loose double-helix pattern. “Wow… So it seems like your control actually improved along with it…”
“Yes… That much is true.” Replies Aurion as the hair strands straighten themselves and settles back on Tesla’s shoulders. The glow in his eyes receded.
“Any drawbacks, Ossan?”
“You tell me.”
“Well for one, I think it’s too conspicuous.”
“Touché.”
“What caused it?” asked Tesla, twirling the now inactive lock of hair around her fingers.
Aurion shrugged, “Who knows?”
Tesla’s eyes sharpened, “You’re lying.”
“Am I now?” Aurion eyelids close halfway as he stared directly down at Tesla’s own.
“I know you are… No matter how you make your eyes move.” Tesla crosses her arms and continues the oddly matched staring contest, “There are already too many weird things about you, Ossan; I intent to find out about the newer ones before they get out of hand.”
The older man only chuckles and pats Tesla’s head, “What’s this…? It looks like I have someone who’s investigating my case.” Aurion chides Tesla teasingly. “Good luck in trying to figure me out, Mahou Tantei (Magic Detective) Tesla-kun.”
“Ehehe~.”
“Heh.”
The two burst into chuckles. After a short while, the two can already be seen conversing casually at the study table; with Aurion sitting on the chair while Tesla was on the table sitting with her knees and elbows together. Her chin rested on her hands while her ankles were crossed and swinging to and fro. They were talking to each sideways.
“An invitation to command a naval ship… and you turned it down?”
“Yeah.” Tesla replied indifferently as she dislodged her arms to use them in leaning back on the table with her hands. “It was interesting, but I’d rather stay by Hayate’s side.”
“Oh?” a grin spread across Aurion’s face, “I feel glad for the people who would have been under your command…” he casually remarked.
Tesla shot a glare at him, “And oh what could you be implying by that, Ossan~?”
“I’ll leave that to your imagination.” Aurion replied sarcastically, dodging a playful kick to his head from Tesla soon afterwards (Well, with Tesla being a Wolkenritter, just a playful kick might actually end up being powerful enough to knock out a normal person). “Anyway,” he dodged a few more kicks, his left hand at last coming up as a blur to catch both of her ankles in his left prosthetic hand (and also his primary device; Reishiki, the expanded-function Storage Device/Prostheric arm which is currently cloaked by transformation magic to look like a normal arm) as she tried to kick him with both feet, “How’re the tutorials with Hayate going?” he asked as Tesla began squirming her legs to loosen his hold (to no avail).
“They’re going fine.” Tesla replied with virtually no change in her tone or expression despite her efforts to free herself from her current predicament, “Hayate may not be the fastest learner there is. But she picked up the rudiments rather quickly.” She tried to pull back her legs harder but failed compared to the mechanical strength of Aurion’s hand holding her ankles together. “And that’s how the way it should be. I’m the best teacher for her in that department.” She gave up her struggling after a few more moments and left her restrained legs suspended limply, prompting Aurion to finally release his hold on her ankles with the implied assurance of no more attempted kicks to his head. “Staff-fighting, as well as any other form of physical combat was never in her field of specialty. So I must say it’s a pleasant surprise that she could actually learn at that pace.”
“Hoho~…” Aurion rested his chin on his left fist, “And that’s not exactly what I expect to hear. Going by proper standards?” he asked furtively.
Tesla blinked once, twice, followed by a slightly embarrassed expression on her features, “Not… good enough.” She finally muttered with some hesitation; as well as a light blush on her cheeks.
“Hahahahahaha!” a burst of derisive laughter burst from Aurion’s mouth, “As expected, not even you can bear to be too strict with her!”
The glare that appeared on the eternal teenager’s face afterwards would have sent those who knew during the rise of the Yami no Sho Incidents running for their lives, (despite being tinged by the faint irritated blush) “But still, average is still better than doing poorly.” she replied grouchily. “Hmph! What about you?”
“What about me?” Aurion asked in turn, eyeing Tesla’s slightly fuming face with amusement, “Hayate or the other three Aces rarely ever got it off easily with me with regards to performance despite my close regards.” Several memories passed through his mind… That of the four Aces at different situations… The four looked upset, even tearful at several instances as far as he can remember those times he was rather strict with them. The memories made him smile wider, “That much is true; don’t you think so, Tesla?”
“There’s still the preferential treatment there, no matter how small.” She insisted.
“Aah, but I have the freedom to do so… since I’m not in the military.” He countered. “I’m just a harmless researcher with a lot of free time and a good grasp of several types of standards.”
Tesla smirked mischievously, “What kind of ‘harmless’ researcher actually runs around with enough equipment and tricks to actually match one or more elite mages?”
Aurion closed one eye in a casual wink, “I guess I can be considered an exception, then.” Tesla countered by sticking out her tongue.
“Anyway…” Tesla shifted subjects as she activated and browsed thru a data screen beside her on Aurion’s table, “Are these the extra plans for Keroko-chan and the other’s devices?”
“Yes.” Aurion replied as he activated another screen himself and shuffled thru several windows, finally showing the specs of the Intelligent Device of Nanoha, Raising Heart. “Though they’re not entirely under my jurisdiction, I did manage to gather some important data on the three other devices from the battles during the Jail Scaglietti Incident. Due to these devices being used in their maximum capacity, I’m now able to obtain proper statistical info at extreme conditions. Oh. And not just from the Intelligent Devices.” he added as the screen scrolled to Vita’s Armed Device, “From Graf Eisen as well.”
Tesla read thru some of the plans regarding Artherion, Takamachi Georashi Keroko, Nanoha’s adopted sister’s Device, “And I see Artherion packs a bit more data compared to Bardiche or Raising Heart…”
“Naturally, with what it’s built for. For now, Artherion’s design is excellent and I can only suggest some light modifications with the fine tuning. The same goes for Bardiche. However,” he raised his right hand to comb back his hair lightly, “I’d like to give Raising Heart some more drastic changes. What with that Blaster System proving quite troublesome…” his expression turned serious.
“Oh…” Tesla’s eyes glinted slightly in realization, “I remember now… You were one of the associate designers of that particular Limit Break system.”
“Correct. Her and Fate’s Limit Break Systems in particular are the two out of the four available that I was directly involved in…” Aurion leaned back on his chair and sighed heavily, “Despite all that’s been said and done, the Blaster System’s still just a way of raising the firepower mage to that of the Elysium’s,” he said, referring to the less recent infantry-sized ‘Modouho’ (Magic Cannon) weapons, (See A’s to StrikerS manga last chapter. I just gave the huge cannon Nanoha’s holding a name.) “as well as the overall combat capability; but at the price of their life… That’s a little too hefty for a deal. And I intend to lower those risks…”
Tesla’s expression softened, “Feeling… guilty?” she inquired.
“A bit.” He admitted wistfully. “8%, or around 101,600 out of 1,270,000 magical units, gone. And that’s a big deal for me, considering I only possess around 736,000 units on my own… Imagine how much worst it would affect the person if he or she isn’t as powerful or as tough as Nanoha…” He rubbed his temples, “I understand that the situation was out of control. But it does really make a person feel a bit disappointed when he knows that he has a possible dampener to the risks involved with one of the systems he co-developed, only to have them come later when it’s already too late. And there are also the Minority Faction’s Anti-AMF development plans that never got finished in time. And even now that they’re finished, they’re still terribly inefficient.” Aurion shrugged, “While we're on the subject, Nanoha’s career WILL get derailed somehow with this. Given how reckless she can be at times… And she’s still so young…” he reached over and borrowed the data screen containing Artherion’s data from Tesla, “The same applies for Keroko, but on a slower but more tenacious way… due to you-know-what.”
“I know…” Tesla sighed. “Though there’s nothing much one can do, in both their cases.” She bent on her back and looked thoughtfully at the ceiling, “Hayate-chan, Vita-chan and Fate-chan’s cases are easier, right?” she bent forward again, reading another line of data.
“That’s definitely true. Fate’s case is almost practically clean, if not for the poor defense on top of the associated strain of her Overdrive. I’ll try fixing that later when the new autonomous energy shielding technology is finished. Vita, being an extremely powerful Knight aside from being an Artificial Human renders the Limit Break technology far safer in her case when compared to others. I don’t think recalibrations are even necessary.” Aurion smirked as he dug out Schwertkreuz’s portable form from his pocket, “And the one I’m working on right now, is more of a chance for Hayate to improve her individual combat performance instead of any sort of power-enhancer… a small gift from me, more than anything else. The issues with the Takamachi’s are currently the most difficult matters to deal with. And their devices have the most involvement with my research... surpassing human limitations with as small repercussions as possible, as well as more unique dealings with exceptional types of energy, such as Neltharion’s taint.” He raised his left hand and clenched it slowly, producing mechanical sounds, “I intend to challenge those boundaries.”
“Hmm~… How thoughtful~…” Tesla remarked coyly. “You’re trying to make them seemingly even more powerful as safely as possible. A fine way to express how much you care…”
“Well,” Aurion replied, still smiling as he repocketed Schwertkreuz, “even though I won’t try denying that there’s an issue of concern for them, I also have the excuse of their devices being powerful and often-used prototypes.” He snapped his fingers, causing all the screens to scroll thru several articles of data quickly. “So they’re a reliable source of new combat data for the later implementation of better magitech elements to the TSAB military force. Plus, they give me plenty of new material that I can’t obtain for myself to work on in my own projects. It’s almost a complete win-win-win situation.”
“You sure know how to candy-coat your objectives.”
“Naturally.” he crossed his arms and leaned back even further on his seat, “How about it, would you like me to take in Gungnir along my upgrade projects as well?” he added as an afterthought.
“Don’t you even dare think of trying to alter Gungnir!” Tesla snapped back swiftly.
“Aw, why not?” Aurion asked in a mock disappointed tone, “The Lightning Bowgun concept has already been drawn out.”
“You even plotted out an upgrade plan without prior notice!” Tesla breathed out exasperatedly as she flicked away a strand of hair in front of her eyes, “Sorry. But unlike Vita-chan, I don’t really think that I need another mode for my device… though I must admit that’s an interesting prospect.”
“Well, should you change your mind, what about you Gungnir?” he addressed Tesla’s device, which was currently in its pendant form around her neck “It’s interesting isn’t it?”
[Ja.] replied a mechanical voice.
“Still talking to other people’s devices arbitrarily, huh, Ossan?’
“I don’t remember there being a ban on that matter.”
“…………………..”
“Ran out of things to say?” asked Aurion while closing his eyes and leaning back further to make his chair stand on its hind legs.
Tesla only sighed and closed her eyes, “No… I just recompiled and reanalyzed the recent events…” she opened her eyes and stared at him perceptively “You sure have changed a lot… Ossan…”
“Oh?” Aurion’s eyes opened slowly, revealing an unnervingly analytical expression in his eyes, lowering his chair back to four legs again. “Would you mind sharing your observations then, Tesla…?”
The shift of atmosphere between the two was so quick it was positively frightening. But it wasn’t one of hostility, but one of a match of wits, Tesla’s tone changed accordingly, losing its playful cadence and being replaced by an almost emotionless and systematic note, “I had my doubts in the past, but now I’ve confirmed it after talking with you…” she crossed her legs and leaned forward, “You’re an excellent actor, but I can’t be fooled so easily… Compared to how you were for almost a decade ago until recently…” she rested her elbow on her thigh and placed her chin on her palm, her half-lidded eyes glinting strangely. Her posture and expression radically changed how she seemed to be. A while ago, she looked just like any playful teenager. Now, she looked a few years more mature than she appears with her aloof posture, “You seem to be more… human…”
“Hmm…” Aurion’s own expression changed severely as well; his eyes losing their usual roguish glint and being replaced by bottomless dark orbs devoid of emotion, “And…?”
“I always observed you whenever I can…” Tesla continued, “In the past, I always felt something abnormal with you… You were undecipherable… I couldn’t figure you out no matter how hard I tried.” Her other hand lifted up to twirl a stray lock of her hair, her eyes gazing sidewards to it, “It was a little unnerving, to be honest… To think you were able to hide so much under that cheerful mask of yours so well… You also managed to do some crazy stuff without batting an eyelash… There was some strange pressure there…” her eyes slid back to stare against his, “Now… it all just disappeared… I’ve never seen you so completely blithe like this. Not to mention talking openly about being concerned about anyone… Nor do you seem to be planning something all the time anymore… Simply put,” she flicked back the lock of hair she was holding, “it’s no longer you.”
Aurion remained expressionless during the stoic tirade, “In the end, what are you trying to prove?” Aurion asked coldly, his voice a fear-provoking whisper. “That I’m a different person?”
“Precisely…” Tesla replied just as frostily. Her free hand extended leisurely, her finger pointed at Aurion’s face, “You… are not Aurion Dauer. Who are you and what did you do to Ossan?”
“Ha…” Aurion’s eyes closed as a crazed grin spread across his face, “Hahaha…” his body slowly began shaking, “Hahahahahaha!” he later laughed out loud. His almost demented laughter was terrifying to hear; continuing for several more seconds, with Tesla, unfazed, only observing silently.
“So I was right, after all…” Tesla whispered.
Aurion’s laughter slowly abated, “My, my… You’re too smart for your own good, little blue lady…” he replied as his eyes opened slowly, revealing his irises currently glowing with a bright azure glow, “Indeed, I am not the Aurion Dauer that you knew…” his eyes narrowed, “And now that you know…” the glow grew brighter as he stood up.
“Ugh.” Tesla tensed as a cobalt glow began surrounding the area around her body, she tried shifting only to find out she was held in place by the blue field. “Kisama…” she directed a glare at him.
He stood up, “Hmm… What to do now that my cover’s blown…?” he continued as his right hand slowly reached towards her head… “A reckless, reckless move, Tesla…” When his hand finally hovered over her head, he sighed and patted her head warmly, “Cut!” he declared jovially, as if the past few seconds never happened. The blue field broke away as well. Then, the two burst into an infectious round of laughter.
The stifling pressure that was building up vanished as if it was never there. Tesla’s serious expression reverted back to her bright and cheery smiling appearance. She raised her head to look at Aurion’s face, winked and asked, “Well? Am I correct?”
“Yes, you are.” Aurion replied as he ruffled Tesla’s hair rather roughly, earning an indignant squeal from the blue-haired girl. “Since when did you notice?”
“Since a few months ago…” Tesla grabbed Aurion’s wrist with both her hands and lifted his hand off her head. She then began fixing her hair with her fingers, “But really, what caused the sudden change? Ossan acting and feeling like a normal person is NOT normal.”
“Well…” Aurion sat back on his chair, “Let’s just say there’s a heavy weight that been lifted from my shoulders… So I can relax completely now.”
“Won’t you dive into specifics?” Tesla asked as she uncrossed her legs and began swinging them alternately.
“Not now. I’m still not in the mood to tell.” Aurion replied mildly. He smirked, “Disappointed?”
“I see…” Tesla acknowledged and jumped off the table, landing on the ground with her arms outstretched, she turned to face him, clasping her hands behind her back, “And no, I’m not disappointed. I like Ossan better this way.” She then smiled vibrantly.
“Heh.” Aurion smiled back, “Reasons?”
“Several.” Tesla raised her hands and ticked off her fingers on her right, “First, you’re now definitely easier to annoy.”
Aurion’s left eyebrow twitched once, “So that’s a good thing, now?!”
Ignoring him, Tesla continued, “Second, you’re easier to figure out. With this, I can follow the kind of game you’re playing easier and beat you more in our strategy games.”
“I see…” he stroked his chin, “Rather selfish reasons so far, though.”
“Of course.” Tesla winked and stuck out her tongue before continuing, “Third, Signum and the others also noticed, though at varying degrees. They’ve become noticeably more relaxed around you as well since you don’t seem to be always plotting something evil anymore.”
“That’s good.”
“Fourth, Hayate-chan and the other Aces would also surely notice or may have already noticed. And they’ll like you better with this.” She suddenly paused and tapped her chin in a thoughtful expression, “Oh, wait… That can’t be very good.”
“Is it now?” Aurion’s right eyebrow twitched this time.
“Fifth,” Tesla’s smile brightened, “I can trust you better even if you’re still a near constant liar.”
Aurion blinked once, and then a wide smile appeared on his face, “Glad to be of service.”
“And that wraps it up.” Tesla cheerfully concluded, spinning on her heel, “Thank you for letting me confirm my suspicions, Ossan.” She said as she walked towards the door. “I had fun.”
“Sure. By the way, do tell me if you’d want the upgrades to Gungnir later.” Aurion raised a hand for farewell.
Tesla stopped just as she was about to exit the door, looked back sideways and raised her left hand, smiling, “I'll think about it. Ja ne~, Ossan.” The sliding door closed.
“More human… ka?” Aurion whispered to himself. He then started chuckling, “Exactly how it turned out to be, don’t you think, Almaria?”
[Hai.] replied Almaria, his second device inserted at one of the holding fields. She is a one-of-a-kind Synchronization Device that he developed himself as a multi-function performance enhancer A.I. when attached to Reishiki. She takes the appearance of a cellphone [Finally, you have achieved your goal.]
“Aah…” Aurion smiled reflectively as he stared at the ceiling, “It was a long and painful journey… Having the very concept and understanding of human emotions taken from me…” he sighed as he raised his left arm, a picture of a group of people shown. His eyes lingered on the stunningly beautiful lavender-haired girl with kind, light-blue eyes; a girl with a stunning resemblance in appearance with Yagami Hayate. “I feel like a fool still doing this… but I’ve done it… I’m living again… Almaria… everyone…”
This time… Almaria the device didn’t reply. That is because she knew that she isn’t the one Aurion is referring to…
But really… Duraxyll 2… You sure know how to pick the proper location, Harlaown… he thought as he removed Schwertkreuz from his pocket, walking a short distance and depositing it to a holding field. The sister planet of Duraxyll… The planet that got ruined because of me… His eyes glowed again as the datapad Tesla delivered earlier flew to his hand. I guess this is for the best… I know everyone’s dead… but still… I want the chance to apologize… even if only to the planet itself… Next week…
A string of commands left his lips, “Reinitialize data recompilation and the installation of System XG-366. Ready backup system check, Z201. Set priority to rank AAA+. Notify me when recalibration is ready.”
[Acknowledged.]
In many ways, I’m stronger now. But I’m also weaker in just as many ways… I missed this feeling… He once again sat and leaned back his chair to make it stand on its two hind legs… It started ten years ago… And who would expect it to end that way? He held his head with his right hand while staring at the ceiling, smiling contentedly, Just being called-
“Otou~san!”
“GUWAH!!!”
*CRASH!**BANG!!**BLAG!!!* (Ouch…)
Hayate, who just entered, first looked a little surprised, but later succumbed into giggles at Aurion’s condition, lying on his back in a ridiculous pose with scattered paraphernalia around him. She walked quickly and kneeled beside his head, sporting the sweetest smile she can muster as she greeted him again, “Hello, Oji-chan!”
“Damn it all, Hayate!” Aurion grunted painfully as his eyes opened to glower at his niece… and recently, daughter figure during some rare occasions (I’d much rather call it dependent on Hayate’s whims), such as now. “I told you not to call me that impulsively! You’ll give people weird ideas!”
“Bleh~.” Hayate stuck out her tongue playfully, “Sorry. Need some help getting up, Oji-chan?”
“No.” Aurion replied as he levitated back upright, bringing along the rest of the stuff that fell down. “And you, little girl.” he laid his hand on Hayate’s head, hard. “You’re going to get detention.”
“E-eh?” Hayate looked intimidated, acting the part properly.
“I’ve recently finished the Bookmark System on the Tome. And you are to memorize and master all of its functions within three days!”
“EH?!” Hayate squealed in protest. “But Oto-”
Aurion quickly lowered his face directly in front of hers and gave his most intimidating frown, “Call me that again right now and I’ll force you to learn how to use the new system within the hour!”
Hayate moaned in protest, making an endearing doe-eyed expression, “But you told me I can call you that when we’re alone!”
“I never said anything of the sort.” Aurion countered tersely. “Just on some rare occasions. RARE, get it?!”
The girl only pouted childishly and looked down, “Hai.”
Heh… Oh yes, I really am weaker now… Aurion sighed inwardly as he finally smiled at her. But I wouldn’t have it any other way.
While I expect some aversion to this fic due to the OC involvement, I'd appreciate what comments and criticisms I can get.:):heh: Oh, and about that's last part, let's just say that Aurion really got close to Hayate after ten years.:p
Otou-san means 'Father'. Yes, yes. I'm crazy! XD XD XD
:upset:
Nighty did say that he had the next part completed... But then, since one of the main storyboarders, An Hero in Disguise disappeared and never returned again...:upset:
But then, I guess it's maybe for the best...:heh: That story was filled to the brim with HAXX!:heh:
Well, we could use the OC timeline you guys have, and compile a single story around that timeline, perhaps using nightengales saga of saga and before saga as the official history... just by doing that we'd have a story of epic proportions, and something very worth everyones time reading :D
Yep!:D Up to now, nothing is yet to match Nighty's most EPIC!!! Saga of Saga story.:D
Let's get back on topic!
Her eyes watched Fate go to said closet and root through it. “Hm... I can't really wear this lingerie under a work uniform... I'll have to lose my garter and stockings. Can I borrow some socks too?”
“Sure, in my bottom dresser drawer.” Fate plucked a shirt and looked at it, pondering on if it would look good on her friend or not. After a few seconds of silence Nanoha's shocked gasp made her turn around. “What is it-oh!” A hand went to her mouth when she saw Nanoha holding a certain object in her hands that she kept hidden in her drawer.
“Wow, Fate-chan!” Nanoha had a smile that would make even the Cheshire Cat envious. “How did you get one of these!?”
“I'm going to die,” Fate covered her face with both hands. “That is...”
“I know what it is,” Nanoha teased. “I want to know how you got it.”
What is it? It could be an imported Mexican jumping bean. Knowing me and my play on words... Think what you will. :heh:
I was talking about Velvet the Black Panther
http://www.amazon.com/Beanie-Babies-Velvet-Black-Panther/dp/B00001QEDK
pervs
Awwww~ cuteee!!
Thanks for the fluffy moment and for showing us that new face of your Fate-chan.
I'll need to get one of those if you're adding it to your fic :)
Saludos, Haru
Awwww~ cuteee!!
Thanks for the fluffy moment and for showing us that new face of your Fate-chan.
I'll need to get one of those if you're adding it to your fic :)
Saludos, Haru
lol, I'm debating if I want to make it Velvet or if I want to make it something "adult related" both are funny....VOTE TIME here's your chance to influence Saved by the Bell!
Her eyes watched Fate go to said closet and root through it. “Hm... I can't really wear this lingerie under a work uniform... I'll have to lose my garter and stockings. Can I borrow some socks too?”
“Sure, in my bottom dresser drawer.” Fate plucked a shirt and looked at it, pondering on if it would look good on her friend or not. After a few seconds of silence Nanoha's shocked gasp made her turn around. “What is it-oh!” A hand went to her mouth when she saw Nanoha holding a certain object in her hands that she kept hidden in her drawer.
“Wow, Fate-chan!” Nanoha had a smile that would make even the Cheshire Cat envious. “How did you get one of these!?”
“I'm going to die,” Fate covered her face with both hands. “That is...”
“I know what it is,” Nanoha teased. “I want to know how you got it.”
A.) Nanoha finds Velvet, the Black Panther Beanie Baby
B.) Nanoha finds a.....personal massager.....
Each will make the girls get closer, both will be for FUN and will not lead to some weird OOC scene. Which means,yes, if you pick B it will lead to laughing and teasing and not a lemon scene.
Archive Update!
Aaron008R has been added
A for cuteness! I want a Fate-chan with a cute side~
Also B is out of character (but probably not for your Fate :heh:)
Saludos, Haru
SpaceBrotha
2008-01-13, 11:20
Ugyahhh!:eyespin: I might as well post the story now!:eyespin:
This story is my own continuation of StrikerS. As such, it has a slightly unhealthy dosage of OC's. But, I whipped up a simplified version of my OC's profile for easier reading.
Part 1...
Part 2...
While I expect some aversion to this fic due to the OC involvement, I'd appreciate what comments and criticisms I can get.:):heh: Oh, and about that's last part, let's just say that Aurion really got close to Hayate after ten years.:p
Yes! Aurion has landed in the fanfic thread! :D
no, really, i ran into the guy accidentally when trying to find out more about nightys Saga, and Aurion instantly took on the mantle of "Best friggin character in nanohaverse!" :D
Note how the two girls who visit him the most are also quick to act out any scene he puts up (the doppleganger with tesla, and the reprimanding teacher with hayate), i wonder if people with acting skills like him more than ones without... :p
Nighty did say that he had the next part completed... But then, since one of the main storyboarders, An Hero in Disguise disappeared and never returned again...:upset:
But then, I guess it's maybe for the best...:heh: That story was filled to the brim with HAXX!:heh:
aww... does that mean that you won't be pursuing the 'caster' plot either? :upset:
Yep!:D Up to now, nothing is yet to match Nighty's most EPIC!!! Saga of Saga story.:D
Quite, what i had in mind was something along the lines of a synopsis of the history of belka, then saga of saga, time skip and profiles of much of the OC cast involved (keroko, tesla, aurion and kha pop in mind), then putting up the stories involved in a chronological order, probably starting with the bits we know of aurions past, after saga and then some...
...the resulting story would be epic not only in WIN, but also in LENGTH. :D
@Satashi: B Just because it will pump embarrasment up by the powers!
And I just can't stop grinning like a chopped turnip when i think about the situation, it's just too funny! :D
A
Either way, I'll be grinning like an idiot by the time this is through, so might as well go with the panther.
Probably because I had one of my own... :tinfoil:
Kirika-chan
2008-01-13, 13:04
I pick A. Because it's so cute for Fate-chan :p
Until end of tomorrow to vote.
You know, I kinda like doing this. Adds a neat little flare to writing. I'll try and offer little bitty things like this to be voted on for Saved by the Bell. When I can, no promises. It helps me on a character's personality too. what other's think the most will help me guide my characters on the right path.
Also, don't forget that other authors love comments too :3 Even if it's not a vote, helpful advice is always welcome so be sure to say what's on your mind!
Until end of tomorrow to vote.
You know, I kinda like doing this. Adds a neat little flare to writing. I'll try and offer little bitty things like this to be voted on for Saved by the Bell. When I can, no promises. It helps me on a character's personality too. what other's think the most will help me guide my characters on the right path.
Personally I don't like the idea too much, but if you want to do it I think this is not the best place to make the poll, probably an external poll where everyone can take part of it would be better… Can you post links at fanfiction.net?
Saludos, Haru
Nina.Wolken
2008-01-13, 14:41
Time to vote has come for me, so I choose A too, because of the cuteness of the scene. And because Fate couldn't have possibly forget that the B-thing was in this drawer, it has to be hidden somewhere else, let's Nanoha found it latter :uhoh:...
Personally I don't like the idea too much, but if you want to do it I think this is not the best place to make the poll, probably an external poll where everyone can take part of it would be better… Can you post links at fanfiction.net?
Saludos, Haru
FF.N will ban your account for things like that. and you can't post links there either. Not only that, you can't use "special characters" either. like my "~**~" for page breaks. or even anything else: @#$%^&*+ <- none of those work. If you have anything that would normally make an emoticon, it's filtered out as well. Animesuki is literally the only place I can poll. I'd also prefer a voting poll where you just click and hit submit. Maybe lurkers would vote more then. Unfortunetly, I don't have time to make a webpage for that.
Time to vote has come for me, so I choose too, because of the cuteness of the scene. And because Fate couldn't have possibly forget that the B-thing was in this drawer, it has to be hidden somewhere else, let's Nanoha found it latter :uhoh:...
lol so you want Nanoha to find it later then? Do other people like that idea as well, or do you prefer her not to have one? Either way is good for me, I just like the funniness it can provide.
Edit x3: oh snap, page claim!
SpaceBrotha
2008-01-13, 15:02
lol so you want Nanoha to find it later then? Do other people like that idea as well, or do you prefer her not to have one? Either way is good for me, I just like the funniness it can provide.
sounds like a possibility for double the fun, so yes, by all means do that. ;)
FF.N will ban your account for things like that. and you can't post links there either. Not only that, you can't use "special characters" either. like my "~**~" for page breaks. or even anything else: @#$%^&*+ <- none of those work. If you have anything that would normally make an emoticon, it's filtered out as well. Animesuki is literally the only place I can poll. I'd also prefer a voting poll where you just click and hit submit. Maybe lurkers would vote more then. Unfortunetly, I don't have time to make a webpage for that.
Well, then you can link the poll at your profile, and tell the people to vote there.
I'm sure that there are tons of pages to make free polls, I searched in Google and I found this one: http://snappoll.com/
You don't need to register, you only make the poll and the web gives you the link
Here's an example:
http://snappoll.com/poll/244331.php
lol so you want Nanoha to find it later then? Do other people like that idea as well, or do you prefer her not to have one? Either way is good for me, I just like the funniness it can provide.
I don't like the idea, I think that it's OOC, I can’t see Fate-chan as the perv type, not even your Fate-chan :heh:
As I said before please try to don't sacrifice quality for fanservice.
Saludos, Haru
Well, then you can link the poll at your profile, and tell the people to vote there.
I'm sure that there are tons of pages to make free polls, I searched in Google and I found this one: http://snappoll.com/
You don't need to register, you only make the poll and the web gives you the link
Here's an example:
http://snappoll.com/poll/244331.php
I don't like the idea, I think that it's OOC, I can’t see Fate-chan as the perv type, not even your Fate-chan :heh:
As I said before please try to don't sacrifice quality for fanservice.
Saludos, Haru
Ooh, that's nifty. I'm a little hesitant about linking a poll in my profile. Maybe I'll look into that. Thanks for the link on polls! I'll use them for sure for Lyrical days <3
And as for Fate, it's not really a perverted thing. A lot of girls have those. It's just like someone else said "Males and females are both equally perverted, males are just more open about it".
As for what Fate would OWN actually makes it different. I was thinking of some cute little thing that's black and had yellow lightning bolts on it.
What a character owns really defines them. Just as Fate would be "ultra adorable" if she had a secret beanie baby collection, she would also be "Shyly cute" If Nanoha found something that revealed that Fate was a little frustrated with her love life.
I'm kind of scared to go any deeper on development on Fate by talking about what could logically be found, because I think it's a little TOO NSFW, even if it's about the fic. ><
Voting B I guess.... Don't think Feito is that type, but It's cute regardless.
okay here, let's try this.
What does Nanoha find?
http://snappoll.com/poll/244346.php
Vote there :D it'll save spam on board too. Tho if you want to comment on your vote, don't hesitate!
SpaceBrotha
2008-01-13, 16:33
okay here, let's try this.
What does Nanoha find?
http://snappoll.com/poll/244346.php
Vote there :D it'll save spam on board too. Tho if you want to comment on your vote, don't hesitate!
duly voted...
That works right up to the point where someone actually decides to play unfair, sad as it is. :uhoh:
duly voted...
That works right up to the point where someone actually decides to play unfair, sad as it is. :uhoh:
I trust everyone to play fair. Remember that you are saying your opinion, not forcing it by cheating. If the numbers look weird I'll stop using polls like this. But I don't think there will be a problem
okay here, let's try this.
What does Nanoha find?
http://snappoll.com/poll/244346.php
Vote there :D it'll save spam on board too. Tho if you want to comment on your vote, don't hesitate!
Well, then I'm voting A for cute again, I think the previous vote in the forum will not count now.
That works right up to the point where someone actually decides to play unfair, sad as it is. :uhoh:
I know how that site works, as well as using cookies the site also registers your ip, so you can’t vote two times from a same PC. This is the securest way to manage a poll, and all the sites are working using this method now, even if that means that the server will need a huge additional table in the Data Base with entries for every poll where the IPs will be stored.
Saludos, Haru
Yaya-chan
2008-01-13, 19:01
Aaron008R I loved the Fate/Chrono interaction.
I'm not a Yuunoha fan but Hayate was great with her remarks. Omedetou. :)
About Saved by the bell.
It would be great if Fate thinks she has found that "item" but she gets the plushie instead. ;)
So, I also voted for A.
Sorry for my bad english.
Yoroshiku. :blush:
Reiji Tabibito
2008-01-13, 19:02
lol, I'm debating if I want to make it Velvet or if I want to make it something "adult related" both are funny....VOTE TIME here's your chance to influence Saved by the Bell!
Her eyes watched Fate go to said closet and root through it. “Hm... I can't really wear this lingerie under a work uniform... I'll have to lose my garter and stockings. Can I borrow some socks too?”
“Sure, in my bottom dresser drawer.” Fate plucked a shirt and looked at it, pondering on if it would look good on her friend or not. After a few seconds of silence Nanoha's shocked gasp made her turn around. “What is it-oh!” A hand went to her mouth when she saw Nanoha holding a certain object in her hands that she kept hidden in her drawer.
“Wow, Fate-chan!” Nanoha had a smile that would make even the Cheshire Cat envious. “How did you get one of these!?”
“I'm going to die,” Fate covered her face with both hands. “That is...”
“I know what it is,” Nanoha teased. “I want to know how you got it.”
A.) Nanoha finds Velvet, the Black Panther Beanie Baby
B.) Nanoha finds a.....personal massager.....
Each will make the girls get closer, both will be for FUN and will not lead to some weird OOC scene. Which means,yes, if you pick B it will lead to laughing and teasing and not a lemon scene.
Righto! Off to vote!!
Saved by the Bell VI
Status: Sorta done. Going to add journal entries as a bonus at end of chapter.
length:5.6k words without journal entry. Pending spell check.
ETA: Tomorrow. I don't want to rush this, as I may re-do one part.
voting closed, she found a beanie baby :3
Just wanted to drop by and say again how much I'm enjoying Saved by the Bell. I'd honestly have to say it's my favorite fanfic by you. The romance isn't rushed at all, and I liked the fact you had it viewed by a third party as well.
Other than a few typos here and there, I can't think of much to add for a constructive review, and I apologize about that. I know some authors would rather hear about improvement to their work than constant praise. :p
As for the poll, I personally like the idea. It was fun to be able to influence your story in a small way. I do hope it stays to minor things though, as any major plot elements should be left to your own decision, but of course that's just my opinion. :heh:
Just wanted to drop by and say again how much I'm enjoying Saved by the Bell. I'd honestly have to say it's my favorite fanfic by you. The romance isn't rushed at all, and I liked the fact you had it viewed by a third party as well.
Other than a few typos here and there, I can't think of much to add for a constructive review, and I apologize about that. I know some authors would rather hear about improvement to their work than constant praise. :p
As for the poll, I personally like the idea. It was fun to be able to influence your story in a small way. I do hope it stays to minor things though, as any major plot elements should be left to your own decision, but of course that's just my opinion. :heh:
Oh yeah, polls would only be for small un important things. Like the one this time, I could have easily done one or the other but figured "eh, why not let them decide?"
I don't really mind what people say about my stories, just as long as they say something to let me know they enjoyed it or it could be improved. So don't hold back ^^ I don't need constant praise, but would prefer actually discussing it, what you thought at parts, ect.
Also, remember others like to hear things too. I actively reply but a lot of other authors don't have time to reply so many times a day, but I assure you, they still read what you say ^^
Double post FTW!
Okay, so I lied.
Saved by the Bell VI
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3991951/6/
Enjoy
edit: once you read, check out This post (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1341947&postcount=12413) for pictures of Saved by the Bell! (spoilers for chapter 6 so don't look at before you read)
Double post FTW!
Okay, so I lied.
Saved by the Bell VI
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3991951/6/
Enjoy
edit: once you read, check out This post (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1341947&postcount=12413) for pictures of Saved by the Bell! (spoilers for chapter 6 so don't look at before you read)
It's always a pleasant surprise to find an update of this right before sleeping. :heh:
This chapter was another fun little adventure to read. I personally liked how Nanoha and Hayate were in their barrier jackets, but in a real life setting. Too bad Fate wasn't able to join in the fun. Her new StrikerS barrier jacket is my favorite. :p
Nanoha's reaction to Fate was also realistic imo. It reminded me of when a childhood friend told me she was bi, back in high school. I honestly didn't know how to react, due to never expecting it, but realized it didn't change anything. :)
The diary entries at the bottom were also a nice bonus. I really enjoyed reading those, and hope to see more in the future.
ghazghkull
2008-01-14, 00:17
Makes me wish I could draw....
I wouldn't mind drawing a sexy-looking Nanoha in lingerie a try if I had the skill -_-
Oh well, I can always imagine it in my head ;)
Estavali
2008-01-14, 00:34
Ugyahhh!:eyespin: I might as well post the story now!:eyespin:
This story is my own continuation of StrikerS. As such, it has a slightly unhealthy dosage of OC's. But, I whipped up a simplified version of my OC's profile for easier reading.
The canon characters to be involved are:
Main Story:
Yagami Hayate
Signum
Vita
Rein
Shamal
Agito
Zafira
Later Arcs:
Chrono Harlaown
Fate Testarossa Harlaown
Bit Parts:
Takamachi Nanoha (Sorry. But she shouldn't be forcing herself after that battle in StrikerS.)
Verossa Acous
Vivio Takamachi
Yuuno Scrya
OC Cast:
Aurion Dauer (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=942335&postcount=106)
Profile part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=943183&postcount=116), 3 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=944447&postcount=129), 4 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=944689&postcount=140)
Tesla (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=987123&postcount=1562)
Grandis Lacetti (I'll put the profiles later)
Luozorl von Mazda
Lyriel Mazda
+more later
While not absolutely necessary, I heavily suggest that one should read Aurion's FF-universe simplified profile. Oh, and Tesla's and Keroko's as well.:) If not, the reader might become confused with why Aurion is known to the other Canon Characters here and why is there a fifth Wolkenritter.:heh:
Here I go!:mad:
Part 1...
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As one can probably tell, a large part of the focus of this story (aside from the main OC plot) is on Hayate.:D After all the excessive shafting and utter humiliation (:frustrated:) she received in StrikerS, I plan to give her some proper exposure and development here.:) (Of course, under reasonable bounds.) Part 2 to come at the next post since it can't fit.:heh: She's 21 years old here now.
Part 2...
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While I expect some aversion to this fic due to the OC involvement, I'd appreciate what comments and criticisms I can get.:):heh: Oh, and about that's last part, let's just say that Aurion really got close to Hayate after ten years.:p
Otou-san means 'Father'. Yes, yes. I'm crazy! XD XD XD
Nighty did say that he had the next part completed... But then, since one of the main storyboarders, An Hero in Disguise disappeared and never returned again...:upset:
But then, I guess it's maybe for the best...:heh: That story was filled to the brim with HAXX!:heh:
Yep!:D Up to now, nothing is yet to match Nighty's most EPIC!!! Saga of Saga story.:D
Good job there, mate :D. Please allow me to throw my two cents.
Generally a good start-off. The flow is slow, but then again you're introducing the readers to new characters and a rush job would certainly be confusing for people who are unaccquainted with the OCs. The introduction to Aurion's character is quite nicely done methinks. I like the way you (and Aurion) handled Hayate's post-J.S insecurities. Shake them well before showing them how to look at life positively :).
I believe the pace would definitely quicken once the team reaches Duraxyll 2 (though the name of the planet sounds strangely similar to a certain brand of battery :heh:).
However, like TK I believe the moonspeak can be reduced. To me it kinda disturbs the flow of the story and people whose command on moonspeak is not as strong would be lost as to what your characters are saying. I believe that you are trying to convey the exact feel of the characters with Japanese, and sometimes another language would leave the feeling to be lost in translation. But put it in another way, it could also be possible that exploring ways on how to convey the same feel via English could also open new ways to improve the flow as well.
Hope this is useful :). In any case, keep 'em coming! :D
Aaron008R
2008-01-14, 03:30
Yes! Aurion has landed in the fanfic thread! :D
no, really, i ran into the guy accidentally when trying to find out more about nightys Saga, and Aurion instantly took on the mantle of "Best friggin character in nanohaverse!" :D
Wow......
Having my OC considered as a 'Best' character is one of the best ever complements I can get!:D:D:D:D:D:D
Thanks!:D:D:D
Note how the two girls who visit him the most are also quick to act out any scene he puts up (the doppleganger with tesla, and the reprimanding teacher with hayate), i wonder if people with acting skills like him more than ones without... :p
That doppelganger part was not an act but rather Tesla's percieving him.:p And nah, he has a rather divided relations base...:heh:
aww... does that mean that you won't be pursuing the 'caster' plot either? :upset:
Sadly...:upset:
Aaron008R I loved the Fate/Chrono interaction.
I'm not a Yuunoha fan but Hayate was great with her remarks. Omedetou. :)[
Thanks a lot!:D You're the first one to comment on that particular interaction from the two boards...:heh:
Good job there, mate :D. Please allow me to throw my two cents.
Generally a good start-off. The flow is slow, but then again you're introducing the readers to new characters and a rush job would certainly be confusing for people who are unaccquainted with the OCs. The introduction to Aurion's character is quite nicely done methinks. I like the way you (and Aurion) handled Hayate's post-J.S insecurities. Shake them well before showing them how to look at life positively :).
Thanks.:D Like I mentioned in this thread earlier, I love piecing together how characters' minds work.:D Though I'm getting kinda nervous once Fuyu gets to read them and points out some mistakes in my reasonings...:uhoh::heh: She's the psychology student, not me...:heh:
I believe the pace would definitely quicken once the team reaches Duraxyll 2 (though the name of the planet sounds strangely similar to a certain brand of battery :heh:).
Actually, Duraxyll is a name of a mech from the Masoukishin Series of the Super Robot Taisen franchise...:heh:
However, like TK I believe the moonspeak can be reduced. To me it kinda disturbs the flow of the story and people whose command on moonspeak is not as strong would be lost as to what your characters are saying. I believe that you are trying to convey the exact feel of the characters with Japanese, and sometimes another language would leave the feeling to be lost in translation. But put it in another way, it could also be possible that exploring ways on how to convey the same feel via English could also open new ways to improve the flow as well.
Duly noted.:) I'll do some edits and a small translation section for easier understanding. I guess I neglected this from my considerations.:heh: Thanks for the reminder.:D
Hope this is useful :). In any case, keep 'em coming! :D
It was very useful!:bow: Thanks a lot!:D Will get to work on it now!:D
Kirika-chan
2008-01-14, 05:37
Double post FTW!
Okay, so I lied.
Saved by the Bell VI
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3991951/6/
Enjoy
edit: once you read, check out This post (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1341947&postcount=12413) for pictures of Saved by the Bell! (spoilers for chapter 6 so don't look at before you read)
I like when you lied :D
And it was a good surprise this morning to read the chapter VI *___*
But the end is... T.T Nanoha seems to not change for Fate, but... I don't know ^^' (She, maybe, not really honest with Fate when she said "nothing change" because I feel her more distant... >_>)
So, I'm waiting for the next :p (I hope is soon T.T)
And, really good job Satashi ^^
Glad people seem to like. Special thanks for the fanart ^_^
Archive Update:
Nightengale has been added with FF.N profile. OC profile incoming after work today
[Edit] 13 hours later.....Page claim!
Sam the Onion
2008-01-14, 09:35
Double post FTW!
Okay, so I lied.
Saved by the Bell VI
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3991951/6/
Enjoy
edit: once you read, check out This post (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1341947&postcount=12413) for pictures of Saved by the Bell! (spoilers for chapter 6 so don't look at before you read)
YES! *Victory dance*
Diary entries! I was going to ask if we could get those but they came anyway :D
As for the text itself. I have nothing to criticize about, so I'll just thank you for the new chapter. Best one so far for me.
krisslanza
2008-01-14, 09:54
So I lied about that Monday release of the 3rd chapter of Lyrical Days :uhoh:
Sorry but I got into a minor car accident on Saturday and it kinda sucked up a lot of time... @_@ I'll be trying to finish it by Tuesday or Wedensday... Probably closer to Weds as I've gotten like... 4 or 5 pages done in my journal.
Gomen .-.;;
YES! *Victory dance*
Diary entries! I was going to ask if we could get those but they came anyway :D
As for the text itself. I have nothing to criticize about, so I'll just thank you for the new chapter. Best one so far for me.
Diary entries will be at the end of every chapter, mainly talking nonsense just to give an inside view on how they view each other. Also for character development. Both girls want a tattoo, Fate's butterfly and Nanoha's angel wings.
Who knows, maybe the tattoos, although small, can be plot....
So I lied about that Monday release of the 3rd chapter of Lyrical Days :uhoh:
Sorry but I got into a minor car accident on Saturday and it kinda sucked up a lot of time... @_@ I'll be trying to finish it by Tuesday or Wednesday... Probably closer to Weds as I've gotten like... 4 or 5 pages done in my journal.
Gomen .-.;;
Everything came out okay, obviously, if you're here telling us about it. But I'll ask anyway. You okay? Don't worry about updates, just take care of that stuff first D: Then we'll beg for updated :heh:
krisslanza
2008-01-14, 12:31
Oh I'm fine :heh: I just smashed the bumper of my car and dented the radiator in the process. Trailer hitches penetrate into a car very nicely thankyouverymuch hitch. It'll be at least a couple of weeks until it gets fixed, I had to spent a nice few hours of Sunday helping remove the bumper.
But yeah I'm fine. It just totally took up a lot of time getting all that stuff sorted out. :nod: I'm not some zombie writer with a pencil for a hand and a journal on the other. :heh: Chapter 3 is just coming along slowly... I'd have to pin the blame on I've never, ever written a fiction where dating is involved. There are some other unknowns I have to take care of in further chapters but... Just slow writing is all.
EDIT:
Maybe my only 'injury' is the occasional pain in my chest and neck from the impact maybe. My car has no airbags so luckily it wasn't a really big impact <.<;
SpaceBrotha
2008-01-14, 12:36
Oh I'm fine :heh: I just smashed the bumper of my car and dented the radiator in the process. Trailer hitches penetrate into a car very nicely thankyouverymuch hitch. It'll be at least a couple of weeks until it gets fixed, I had to spent a nice few hours of Sunday helping remove the bumper.
But yeah I'm fine. It just totally took up a lot of time getting all that stuff sorted out. :nod: I'm not some zombie writer with a pencil for a hand and a journal on the other. :heh: Chapter 3 is just coming along slowly... I'd have to pin the blame on I've never, ever written a fiction where dating is involved. There are some other unknowns I have to take care of in further chapters but... Just slow writing is all.
EDIT:
Maybe my only 'injury' is the occasional pain in my chest and neck from the impact maybe. My car has no airbags so luckily it wasn't a really big impact <.<;
those are usual 'injuries' from car accidents, had the same back when my own car got real intimate with a pole... half a meter into the hood intimate...
...just called for a ride and did my rounds right after it too :p
But it's always a good idea to go get checked with a doctor, you never know if there's some real damage in the 'minor' injuries.
krisslanza
2008-01-14, 14:17
I think I'm fine :heh: Although if the little pang of pains get kind of long I'll go get it checked out... :uhoh:
Baaah. My friend seems to be absent today or horribly busy. I'll see if he pops up later so I can check if he uploaded the Arc-en-Ciel chapter he did. I'm pondering maybe working on my Arc-en-Ciel section... Though I wouldn't have a empty journal to put it in. Unless I scratched out my Yggdra Union journal and use that for Arc-en-Ciel as I haven't written anything in it yet.
The only thing really holding me back from my Arc-en-Ciel section is the fact I haven't really designed Rune's barrier jacket which severely limits how far in I can go... :heh:
For the curious minds... My partner in crime's Arc-en-Ciel section focuses on Varista and Fate. Mine focuses on the TSAB and Nanoha. A various amount of OCs will be used as well. Nothing will be told from Nanoha, Fate, or any CCs point of view but rather through OC eyes.
I'd assume mine will have a lot more combat and such, with the parts of dialogue and such. The reason for this is Rune is involved in (most) of the battles of the war. Erika von Cale may be involved in a number of battles as well but... I think that section will mostly focus on things on Varista and stuff.
@krisslanza:
Vivio smiled happily at her mother when she came home from high school cheer leading practice. "Fate-mama! I brought you some flowers!" To her mother's surprise, she was suddenly handed a dozen flowers of a mixed variety.
"Thank you, Vivio." Fate looked at the present with interest. "Wow, they're lovely. Whatever for?"
Vivio clasped both her hands behind her back and rocked on her heels. "Wellll, I know how much you hate loaning your car and I just had to have it and I just wanted to say thank you." She smiled again, eyes sparkling. "Fate-mama, you're the best!"
"Aw, come here sweetheart!" Fate melted at the words and hugged her almost eighteen year old daughter. "You made my day with these." Looking back at them, she couldn't but smile again. "I'll put them in a vase and keep them in the living room."
"And," Vivio went on, following her. "I want to let you know I did all the chores too. I even did the shopping for the week. I thought since I was out I'd do it for you."
"Thank you!" Fate arranged the flowers.
"I'm home!" Nanoha's voice came up as she walked through the door. "Fate-chan what on earth happened to your car? It looks like a trailer hitch got intimate with it?"
Fate went still as Vivio slowly started backing away. "So yeah, um, I'll just... go to my room now."
"Vi...vi...oh..." Fate muttered slowly, turning her head at the same pace.
Vivio ran. Fast. So fast she almost made use of her flying training. Scrambling down the stairs and almost falling, pushing past people who she normally saluted, and out into the open field of section six. Just as soon as she thought she was free, a yellow binding spell tripped her and froze her in place.
Hovering in the air, her feet kicked frantically while trying to get traction again. "Help! Heeeeeeelp!"
Fate descended in front of her and patted Bardiche across her palm. "Can't no one help you now little missy..."
~**~
Vivio rubbed her butt ruefully, light tears in her eyes. "I'm too old for this, Nanoha-mama."
"Now now," Nanoha smiled at her after the spanking. Be happy Fate-mama dragged you here for me to do it."
"But still..." Sitting down, she winced. "Ow, you spanked me too hard."
"Did not," Nanoha nudged her. "You know I didn't." With a wink, she smiled and looked out the window towards the training ground where Fate was giving giving her Advanced students a personal training session. Yellow lighting was flying thick around them and she was sure she could hear the faint screams for mercy. "I wrecked her car once."
"No way, really?" Vivio looked highly interested. "When"
Nanoha thought back. "I think I was about to turn twenty-two at the time. I was fighting a 'droid and blew it up in the air. A piece fell onto Fate's car."
"That's hardly a wreck, Mama."
"And then the entire 'droid fell on it... and blew up." She looked at Vivio, who was grinning ear to ear. "I think that's the only time I was scared Fate-mama was going to hit me. We didn't speak for almost two days."
"How did it get better?"
"I almost broke her neck while she strangled me." Nanoha let Vivio panic for a few seconds before laughing. "Long story, but after that we were okay again. I bought her a new car. It lasted almost three years. The one she got when she was pregnant with you lasted a good five years because she couldn't work. Oh those were good times.
Vivio's interest was perked again. "What was I like when I was little."
"You was a little angel." Nanoha put an arm around Vivio and, much to the teen's distress, kissed her temple.
"Ew."
"Aw, you used love when I kissed you!"
"I'm grown now."
"Well in that case," Nanoha held her daughter to her tightly. "Let me tell you about the night you was conceived."
"NO!"
"Oh it was fantastic," Nanoha continued, holding the squirming girl who was frantically trying to get away. Knowing full well she was freaking her out, she continued. "Candles, soft music, sexy adult lingerie..."
"MAMA! I'm going to throw up!"
"Nyahahaha!"
krisslanza
2008-01-14, 14:36
I was wondering why my name was attached to that @ XD
That was hilarious :heh: I myself didn't have to go through that, lucky me, although I may end up having to pay the repairs... When I have no job. Not looking forward to that... :uhoh:
But poooooor Vivio. You can't outrun Fate. Even if she didn't bind you... We know she runs insanely fast even without using Sonic Move :nod:
Sam the Onion
2008-01-14, 14:45
@krisslanza:
Vivio smiled happily at her mother when she came home from high school cheer leading practice. "Fate-mama! I brought you some flowers!" To her mother's surprise, she was suddenly handed a dozen flowers of a mixed variety.
"Thank you, Vivio." Fate looked at the present with interest. "Wow, they're lovely. Whatever for?"
Vivio clasped both her hands behind her back and rocked on her heels. "Wellll, I know how much you hate loaning your car and I just had to have it and I just wanted to say thank you." She smiled again, eyes sparkling. "Fate-mama, you're the best!"
"Aw, come here sweetheart!" Fate melted at the words and hugged her almost eighteen year old daughter. "You made my day with these." Looking back at them, she couldn't but smile again. "I'll put them in a vase and keep them in the living room."
"And," Vivio went on, following her. "I want to let you know I did all the chores too. I even did the shopping for the week. I thought since I was out I'd do it for you."
"Thank you!" Fate arranged the flowers.
"I'm home!" Nanoha's voice came up as she walked through the door. "Fate-chan what on earth happened to your car? It looks like a trailer hitch got intimate with it?"
Fate went still as Vivio slowly started backing away. "So yeah, um, I'll just... go to my room now."
"Vi...vi...oh..." Fate muttered slowly, turning her head at the same pace.
Vivio ran. Fast. So fast she almost made use of her flying training. Scrambling down the stairs and almost falling, pushing past people who she normally saluted, and out into the open field of section six. Just as soon as she thought she was free, a yellow binding spell tripped her and froze her in place.
Hovering in the air, her feet kicked frantically while trying to get traction again. "Help! Heeeeeeelp!"
Fate descended in front of her and patted Bardiche across her palm. "Can't no one help you now little missy..."
~**~
Vivio rubbed her butt ruefully, light tears in her eyes. "I'm too old for this, Nanoha-mama."
"Now now," Nanoha smiled at her after the spanking. Be happy Fate-mama dragged you here for me to do it."
"But still..." Sitting down, she winced. "Ow, you spanked me too hard."
"Did not," Nanoha nudged her. "You know I didn't." With a wink, she smiled and looked out the window towards the training ground where Fate was giving giving her Advanced students a personal training session. Yellow lighting was flying thick around them and she was sure she could hear the faint screams for mercy. "I wrecked her car once."
"No way, really?" Vivio looked highly interested. "When"
Nanoha thought back. "I think I was about to turn twenty-two at the time. I was fighting a 'droid and blew it up in the air. A piece fell onto Fate's car."
"That's hardly a wreck, Mama."
"And then the entire 'droid fell on it... and blew up." She looked at Vivio, who was grinning ear to ear. "I think that's the only time I was scared Fate-mama was going to hit me. We didn't speak for almost two days."
"How did it get better?"
"I almost broke her neck while she strangled me." Nanoha let Vivio panic for a few seconds before laughing. "Long story, but after that we were okay again. I bought her a new car. It lasted almost three years. The one she got when she was pregnant with you lasted a good five years because she couldn't work. Oh those were good times.
Vivio's interest was perked again. "What was I like when I was little."
"You was a little angel." Nanoha put an arm around Vivio and, much to the teen's distress, kissed her temple.
"Ew."
"Aw, you used love when I kissed you!"
"I'm grown now."
"Well in that case," Nanoha held her daughter to her tightly. "Let me tell you about the night you was conceived."
"NO!"
"Oh it was fantastic," Nanoha continued, holding the squirming girl who was frantically trying to get away. Knowing full well she was freaking her out, she continued. "Candles, soft music, sexy adult lingerie..."
"MAMA! I'm going to throw up!"
"Nyahahaha!"
Ah good old times :heh: Very enjoyable shortie.
Nanoha is creepy mother :uhoh: But I guess it's about time Vivio learned something about those kind of things ;)
But wasn't Vivio non-magical in 6th D? How could she get flight lessons? :confused:
krisslanza
2008-01-14, 15:08
Remember that old teaser I posted back when Rune was a un-named blonde smoking girl? I felt bored and rather then actually write this out before hand... I felt like re-writing that 'teaser'. This is a total freewrite, why do I do this? ... Because.
The light sighs in a clearly feminine tone, it runs a hand through psuedo-transparent silver hair to brush away a bang obscuring half its face. It casts its mis-matched eyes about the darkness of the room, a glint of red is reflected in its own self-casted light in a scar running down its right silver eye. The woman of light digs into her jacket's pocket as her right hand habitually flicks open, then closes, a lighter.
"So..." the light cracks in a pained tone, "Someone actually bothered to learn history?" a non-descript white pack is withdrawn from her jacket, "And someone bothered to learn this particular history? Couldn't you just look out the window?" she gestures vaguely about her, not really aware if the room has windows or not, a white stick is flicked out of the pack as she continues, "But I digress... I guess someone who was involved in a bulk of the fighting would be the best person to explain this. And one of the few who didn't die when that little 'accident' happened."
She sighed and withdrew the white stick from the matching pack, the stick went into her mouth as the pack disappeared back into her jacket pockets. The lighter flicked open and lit as it burned the stick, a wisp of smoke appearing. Another flick and the lighter disappeared into her sleeves. A light shaking of her head causes the bang to once more fall and cover her blue eye from view.
"I suppose we'll get introductions out of the way first. I guess back in the days... My rank would be lieutenant, and I was in charge of the 367th Ground Battalion. Don't bother going looking them up, they're all dead anyway." the woman spat bitterly and took a drag from her cancer stick, "I'm also a Enforcer, by the name of Rune Juril. I've had the... Pleasure of meeting and being acquainted with the Aces, I didn't know them well... Maybe except Testarossa, but merely since she was around so much." Rune waved her hand dismissively, "Not that it matters anymore. Well now that introductions are done... I suppose you'll want to know how the 'great Time and Space Administration Bureau' has been reduced to ashes and we're at war with ourselves as Varista rebuilds, laughing at our misfortune?"
Rune laughs bitterly and then quickly she sobers and her visible eye narrows, the red glint is noted again in the scar.
"It's a long story. Don't fall asleep."
Whoot. Freewrite.
Ah good old times :heh: Very enjoyable shortie.
Nanoha is creepy mother :uhoh: But I guess it's about time Vivio learned something about those kind of things ;)
But wasn't Vivio non-magical in 6th D? How could she get flight lessons? :confused:
Vivio took lessons when she was little until her parents and friends got in an accident. After that she quit magic. Of course Nanoha's little girl would learn how to fly first :3
Also, Vivio wasn't conceived through sex (although I'm sure they could do that... *coughdoujinshichough* ) so Nanoha is just torturing the poor girl.
@krisslanza: check your PMs, gonna write you one right now
Now or Never
Pairing: Signum/Shamal (shoujo ai)
Summary: There had always been something between them but destiny had never allowed this blurry connection to be anything more. (pre-A's)
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4012124/1/Now_or_never
Now or Never
Pairing: Signum/Shamal (shoujo ai)
Summary: There had always been something between them but destiny had never allowed this blurry connection to be anything more. (pre-A's)
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4012124/1/Now_or_never
Added to archive :D will try and read if I have time later
Also updated: Nightengale's OC stories
krisslanza
2008-01-14, 20:06
Hmmm... You know I could upload my teaser as a really bad 'chapter' of the series... But it sitting there would only keep reminding me I have a lot of work to do :eyespin:
I demand comments! :P
The sound of the wind blew into my ears as I ran down the white lines painted on the ground. My heart beat was pounding fast in my chest with each trained breath of air I took in. I knew my time was good so far but by how much I wasn't sure. All that mattered right now was the footsteps thundering, my hair in the wind, the struggle to be the fastest. The line was coming closer now and I couldn't help but lower my gaze towards it instead of looking in front of myself like I was supposed to. I blew over it and slowed down, hunched over and panting. The team captain whistled at the time, making me smile. I don't know why but this year I have been getting faster. Not as fast as I used to be but sure enough, week by week, I was shaving seconds off my score. My team mates cheered at me and I smiled at them, taking the offered towel from an under classman. She grinned at me happily, making me smile back. Another set of cheers made me turn my attention to the tennis courts a little ways off. Nanoha was jumping with her racquet thrust up in the air while the one across from her kicked the ground disappointedly. The girl turned and even though she was far away, I could swear our eyes met a brief moment before we both turned to look at our respective coaches.
Saved by the Bell VII
By: Satashi
Opening Teaser :p
krisslanza
2008-01-14, 21:52
Nice teaser :heh:
Though I still haven't actually gone and read that... *Sulk*
ghazghkull
2008-01-14, 22:00
The sound of the wind blew into my ears as I ran down the white lines painted on the ground. My heart beat was pounding fast in my chest with each trained breath of air I took in. I knew my time was good so far but by how much I wasn't sure. All that mattered right now was the footsteps thundering, my hair in the wind, the struggle to be the fastest. The line was coming closer now and I couldn't help but lower my gaze towards it instead of looking in front of myself like I was supposed to. I blew over it and slowed down, hunched over and panting. The team captain whistled at the time, making me smile. I don't know why but this year I have been getting faster. Not as fast as I used to be but sure enough, week by week, I was shaving seconds off my score. My team mates cheered at me and I smiled at them, taking the offered towel from an under classman. She grinned at me happily, making me smile back. Another set of cheers made me turn my attention to the tennis courts a little ways off. Nanoha was jumping with her racquet thrust up in the air while the one across from her kicked the ground disappointedly. The girl turned and even though she was far away, I could swear our eyes met a brief moment before we both turned to look at our respective coaches.
Saved by the Bell VII
By: Satashi
Opening Teaser :p
Well this chapter sounds like fun. Looking forward to it. ^^
Ryand-Smith
2008-01-14, 22:05
Generations Comment, Fuck Yes Hayate action! Finay a story besides Acadmey days which focuses on Hayate, and is well written. Does the Author of Acadmey Days post here anyway?
Generations Comment, Yes Hayate action! Finay a story besides Acadmey days which focuses on Hayate, and is well written. Does the Author of Acadmey Days post here anyway?
I don't think so, who does that one? I'll go invite them to drop by
ghazghkull
2008-01-14, 22:33
I don't think so, who does that one? I'll go invite them to drop by
It is called Academy Blues (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3158516/1/Academy_Blues) by Daishi Prime (http://www.fanfiction.net/u/829343/Daishi_Prime). Hope that helps ;)
P.S. It's a really good read. Some of it requires back story of it's predecesorPath of Vengeance (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2845766/1/Path_of_Vengeance) to learn about certain aspects of the story, which I won't tell here, so that it doesn't spoil anything ;) although mind you I skipped that one :heh:.
P.P.S. Here's also the side story for it: Academy Blues Side Stories (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3510860/1/Academy_Blues_Side_Stories)
P.P.P.S. FINALLY A PAGE CLAIM!! XD
SpaceBrotha
2008-01-14, 22:33
Generations Comment, Fuck Yes Hayate action! Finay a story besides Acadmey days which focuses on Hayate, and is well written. Does the Author of Acadmey Days post here anyway?
you wouldn't happen to mean 'academy blues' now would you?
edit: why does everyone keep posting questions and answers while i'm writing mine?
And yes, read path of vengeance first or you'll feel really out of the loop :p
edit 2: and it's quite hayate centric after the path of vengeance, and also an excellent read... i consider myself lucky to have run into it by accident as the first nanoha fanfic i read :)
I heard those were really good, but I've never read because I, for some reason, don't really like reading Hayate that much ( which is odd because I love writing with her)
SpaceBrotha
2008-01-14, 22:46
I heard those were really good, but I've never read because I, for some reason, don't really like reading Hayate that much ( which is odd because I love writing with her)
well try reading the path of vengeance first then, it's not hayate centric in my opinion (though she appears often in it), and if you like it enough, you might want to read academy blues afterwards :p
Edit: err... cancel that, it's hayate centric allright, it's just been quite a while since i read it. :uhoh:
Well, I never thought my fanfics were leet but I stopped for the night and saved and.......
http://i55.photobucket.com/albums/g140/LeviValor/h7.jpg
^^ XD
Random Post of the day goes to Satashi.
Urgh, going to have to get off my lazy ass and start writing again... haven't touched my fics for ages.... TT
^^ XD
Random Post of the day goes to Satashi.
Urgh, going to have to get off my lazy ass and start writing again... haven't touched my fics for ages.... TT
Link me to your fics and/or FF.N profile so I can archive you, btw.
and yes, write more! :D
ghazghkull
2008-01-15, 00:49
Well, I never thought my fanfics were leet but I stopped for the night and saved and.......
http://i55.photobucket.com/albums/g140/LeviValor/h7.jpg
LOL You wrote that in a very short space of time didn't you? LOL XD
You mean this (http://www.fanfiction.net/~liingo)?
Although it doesn't help that I've got nothing on it :p
I can pass you the link to my reference link in the OC thread that lists all my present work, but those works aren't really friendly to people outside of the OC thread since they're set at least 2-3 years from where I want the beginning of the fic to start.. That coupled with the fact that I haven't written nice backgrounds for my OC's since they're going to get explained in the said fic that I'm writing.. We're going to have a lot of confused people..:heh:
Blame the distractions for the lack of writing.... The internets is God for the writer, yet a tool for procratination at the same time...;_;
You mean this (http://www.fanfiction.net/~liingo)?
Although it doesn't help that I've got nothing on it :p
I can pass you the link to my reference link in the OC thread that lists all my present work, but those works aren't really friendly to people outside of the OC thread since they're set at least 2-3 years from where I want the beginning of the fic to start.. That coupled with the fact that I haven't written nice backgrounds for my OC's since they're going to get explained in the said fic that I'm writing.. We're going to have a lot of confused people..:heh:
Blame the distractions for the lack of writing.... The internets is God for the writer, yet a tool for procratination at the same time...;_;
I agree on going back to work with Liingo on this one...
Speaking of which, i've beeon TOO LAZY updating my fics, reading Tech Support Comedy and also
I'm preparing myself for the greatest penitence that i've undertaken so far *cough*Clannad*cough*
Just a Q:
Can we post snippets of planned works/WIPs here? from snip/snap quotes/ficlets, to even OPs? Like what we do in OC...
And Also
@ thread: can anyone rate my Nanoha Works?
@ Satashi: PAY UP YOUR REVIEW DUES!!!
Saint X gets dragged off to the LART shelter.
Part 2...
[Magic Weapons Research Facility, TSAB Naval Base] [May 24th, MC 077] [1635 hours]
Tesla is seen walking briskly towards a singular room at the end of the corridor, her long, blue hair bouncing lightly in tempo to her quick but well-measured strides. A small datapad is clutched in her right arm. As she reached the door, she raised a hand to knock, hesitated, and instead opened the door immediately and poked her head inside. “Ossan~!” she called out loudly in a lively tone.
The only person inside is Aurion, hunched over a small containment field holding the Buch der Nachthimmeis (or the Book of the Night Sky), one of Hayate’s primary devices. He didn’t show any palpable sign of being perturbed by the somewhat abrupt (more like intentionally rude) entrance of the Knight of the Sky, but his left eyebrow twitched noticeably as he paused his typing on the data screen before him.
“What are you doing?” inquired Tesla playfully, obviously paying no heed to the stalled progress.
“Oh, nothing much.” came the reply as Aurion straightened up and turned to look nonchalantly at the smaller girl. His right hand rose to poke Tesla by the forehead as he began a light scolding, “I was just on that one crucial part that might end up refragmenting all the information in the device if I screwed up.” He kept on poking Tesla’s head for every few words he stated “That would have subsequently delayed the installation by several hours. So you should be thankful that I didn’t,” He finished by raising his hand higher and patting her head rather heavily, “Tesla.”
The blue-haired girl winced first, and later giggled as she raised a hand to cover her forehead and stuck out her tongue playfully, “Sorry.”
“Ah, well. Have you got what I called for?”
“Yup. It’s right here.” Tesla answered, handing over the datapad to him.
“Thank you.” Instead of taking the datapad, Aurion turned around and began to work on the Tome again. The datapad simply got surrounded by a cobalt glow and levitated out of Tesla’s hand, floating in front of Aurion and flipping a few pages. “With this data, I should be able to do the proper recalibrations for Schwertkreuz faster…”
“You’re welcome.” Tesla replied cheerfully. “………” Clasping her hands behind her, she stepped forward and bent sideways, gazing curiously at Aurion’s face. “Hmm~,” she stared at his face for several seconds, “I guess they were right.” she mumbled thoughtfully afterwards.
Aurion ignored her first as he finished the rest of the adjustments. After finishing, he closed the several screens and willed the datapad to land on his left hand. “Nanda?” he inquired as he bent sideways himself to match the stare of the girl.
Tesla straightened up and stepped back, with Aurion following cue, “You’re eyes… They were glowing just now, huh?”
“Ah.” Aurion blinked once and smiled strangely, “It seems like they do.” he says later as his eyes begin glowing cobalt, advertently causing exactly twenty strands of hair hanging from Tesla’s shoulder the glow and float gently in front of her face. “And it also seems like it came with a certain bonus”
Tesla raised her hands to let her fingers brush with her currently ‘alive’ hair. As if reacting to the touch, the six strands braided themselves into a loose double-helix pattern. “Wow… So it seems like your control actually improved along with it…”
“Yes… That much is true.” Replies Aurion as the hair strands straighten themselves and settles back on Tesla’s shoulders. The glow in his eyes receded.
“Any drawbacks, Ossan?”
“You tell me.”
“Well for one, I think it’s too conspicuous.”
“Touché.”
“What caused it?” asked Tesla, twirling the now inactive lock of hair around her fingers.
Aurion shrugged, “Who knows?”
Tesla’s eyes sharpened, “You’re lying.”
“Am I now?” Aurion eyelids close halfway as he stared directly down at Tesla’s own.
“I know you are… No matter how you make your eyes move.” Tesla crosses her arms and continues the oddly matched staring contest, “There are already too many weird things about you, Ossan; I intent to find out about the newer ones before they get out of hand.”
The older man only chuckles and pats Tesla’s head, “What’s this…? It looks like I have someone who’s investigating my case.” Aurion chides Tesla teasingly. “Good luck in trying to figure me out, Mahou Tantei (Magic Detective) Tesla-kun.”
“Ehehe~.”
“Heh.”
The two burst into chuckles. After a short while, the two can already be seen conversing casually at the study table; with Aurion sitting on the chair while Tesla was on the table sitting with her knees and elbows together. Her chin rested on her hands while her ankles were crossed and swinging to and fro. They were talking to each sideways.
“Normandy, ka? Finally, command of a ship for yourself.”
“Yeah.” Tesla replied enthusiastically as she dislodged her arms to use them in leaning back on the table with her hands. “The crew is a bit slow for now, but I’ll whip them into shape soon enough.”
“Oh?” a grin spread across Aurion’s face, “I feel sorry them then…” he casually remarked.
Tesla shot a glare at him, “And oh what could you be implying by that, Ossan~?”
“I’ll leave that to your imagination.” Aurion replied sarcastically, dodging a playful kick to his head from Tesla soon afterwards (Well, with Tesla being a Wolkenritter, just a playful kick might actually end up being powerful enough to knock out a normal person). “Anyway,” he dodged a few more kicks, his left hand at last coming up as a blur to catch both of her ankles in his left prosthetic hand (and also his primary device; Reishiki, the expanded-function Storage Device/Prostheric arm which is currently cloaked by transformation magic to look like a normal arm) as she tried to kick him with both feet, “How’re the tutorials with Hayate going?” he asked as Tesla began squirming her legs to loosen his hold (to no avail).
“They’re going fine.” Tesla replied with virtually no change in her tone or expression despite her efforts to free herself from her current predicament, “Hayate-chan may not be the fastest learner there is. But she picked up the rudiments rather quickly.” She tried to pull back her legs harder but failed compared to the mechanical strength of Aurion’s hand holding her ankles together. “And that’s how the way it should be. I’m the best teacher for her in that department. But I’m not always available due to being in my own separate unit.” She gave up her struggling after a few more moments and left her restrained legs suspended limply, prompting Aurion to finally release his hold on her ankles with the implied assurance of no more attempted kicks to his head. “Staff-fighting, as well as any other form of physical combat was never in her field of specialty. So I must say it’s a pleasant surprise that she could actually learn at that pace.”
“Hoho~…” Aurion rested his chin on his left fist, “And that’s not exactly what I expect to hear. Going by proper standards?” he asked furtively.
Tesla blinked once, twice, followed by a slightly embarrassed expression on her features, “Not… good enough.” She finally muttered with some hesitation; as well as a light blush on her cheeks.
“Hahahahahaha!” a burst of derisive laughter burst from Aurion’s mouth, “As expected, not even you can bear to be too strict with her!”
The glare that appeared on the eternal teenager’s face afterwards would have sent those who knew during the rise of the Yami no Sho Incidents running for their lives, (despite being tinged by the faint irritated blush) “But still, average is still better than doing poorly.” she replied grouchily. “Hmph! What about you?”
“What about me?” Aurion asked in turn, eyeing Tesla’s slightly fuming face with amusement, “Hayate or the other three Aces rarely ever got it off easily with me with regards to performance despite my close regards.” Several memories passed through his mind… That of the four Aces at different situations… The four looked upset, even tearful at several instances as far as he can remember those times he was rather strict with them. The memories made him smile wider, “That much is true; don’t you think so, Tesla?”
“There’s still the preferential treatment there, no matter how small.” She insisted.
“Aah, but I have the freedom to do so… since I’m not in the military.” He countered. “I’m just a harmless researcher with a lot of free time and a good grasp of several types of standards.”
Tesla smirked mischievously, “What kind of ‘harmless’ researcher actually runs around with enough equipment and tricks to actually match one or more elite mages?”
Aurion closed one eye in a casual wink, “I guess I can be considered an exception, then.” Tesla countered by sticking out her tongue.
“Anyway…” Tesla shifted subjects as she activated and browsed thru a data screen beside her on Aurion’s table, “Are these the extra plans for Keroko-chan and the other’s devices?”
“Yes.” Aurion replied as he activated another screen himself and shuffled thru several windows, finally showing the specs of the Intelligent Device of Nanoha, Raising Heart. “Though they’re not entirely under my jurisdiction, I did manage to gather some important data on the three other devices from the battles during the Jail Scaglietti Incident. Due to these devices being used in their maximum capacity, I’m now able to obtain proper statistical info at extreme conditions. Oh. And not just from the Intelligent Devices.” he added as the screen scrolled to Vita’s Armed Device, “From Graf Eisen as well.”
Tesla read thru some of the plans regarding Artherion, Takamachi Georashi Keroko, Nanoha’s adopted sister’s Device, “And I see Artherion packs a bit more data compared to Bardiche or Raising Heart…”
“Naturally, with what it’s built for. For now, Artherion’s design is excellent and I can only suggest some light modifications with the fine tuning. The same goes for Bardiche. However,” he raised his right hand to comb back his hair lightly, “I’d like to give Raising Heart some more drastic changes. What with that Blaster System proving quite troublesome…” his expression turned serious.
“Oh…” Tesla’s eyes glinted slightly in realization, “I remember now… You were one of the associate designers of that particular Limit Break system.”
“Correct. Her and Fate’s Limit Break Systems in particular are the two out of the four available that I was directly involved in…” Aurion leaned back on his chair and sighed heavily, “Despite all that’s been said and done, the Blaster System’s still just a way of raising the firepower mage to that of the Elysium’s,” he said, referring to the less recent infantry-sized ‘Modouho’ (Magic Cannon) weapons, (See A’s to StrikerS manga last chapter. I just gave the huge cannon Nanoha’s holding a name.) “as well as the overall combat capability; but at the price of their life… That’s a little too hefty for a deal. And I intend to lower those risks…”
Tesla’s expression softened, “Feeling… guilty?” she inquired.
“A bit.” He admitted wistfully. “8%, or around 101,600 out of 1,270,000 magical units, gone. And that’s a big deal for me, considering I only possess around 736,000 units on my own… Imagine how much worst it would affect the person if he or she isn’t as powerful or as tough as Nanoha…” He rubbed his temples, “I understand that the situation was out of control. But it does really make a person feel a bit disappointed when he knows that he has a possible dampener to the risks involved with one of the systems he co-developed, only to have them come later when it’s already too late. And there are also the Minority Faction’s Anti-AMF development plans that never got finished in time. And even now that they’re finished, they’re still terribly inefficient.” Aurion shrugged, “While we're on the subject, Nanoha’s career WILL get derailed somehow with this. Given how reckless she can be at times… And she’s still so young…” he reached over and borrowed the data screen containing Artherion’s data from Tesla, “The same applies for Keroko, but on a slower but more tenacious way… due to you-know-what.”
“I know…” Tesla sighed. “Though there’s nothing much one can do, in both their cases.” She bent on her back and looked thoughtfully at the ceiling, “Hayate-chan, Vita-chan and Fate-chan’s cases are easier, right?” she bent forward again, reading another line of data.
“That’s definitely true. Fate’s case is almost practically clean, if not for the poor defense on top of the associated strain of her Overdrive. I’ll try fixing that later when the new autonomous energy shielding technology is finished. Vita, being an extremely powerful Knight aside from being an Artificial Human renders the Limit Break technology far safer in her case when compared to others. I don’t think recalibrations are even necessary.” Aurion smirked as he dug out Schwertkreuz’s portable form from his pocket, “And the one I’m working on right now, is more of a chance for Hayate to improve her individual combat performance instead of any sort of power-enhancer… a small gift from me, more than anything else. The issues with the Takamachi’s are currently the most difficult matters to deal with. And their devices have the most involvement with my research... surpassing human limitations with as small repercussions as possible, as well as more unique dealings with exceptional types of energy, such as Neltharion’s taint.” He raised his left hand and clenched it slowly, producing mechanical sounds, “I intend to challenge those boundaries.”
“Hmm~… How thoughtful~…” Tesla remarked coyly. “You’re trying to make them seemingly even more powerful as safely as possible. A fine way to express how much you care…”
“Well,” Aurion replied, still smiling as he repocketed Schwertkreuz, “even though I won’t try denying that there’s an issue of concern for them, I also have the excuse of their devices being powerful and often-used prototypes.” He snapped his fingers, causing all the screens to scroll thru several articles of data quickly. “So they’re a reliable source of new combat data for the later implementation of better magitech elements to the TSAB military force. Plus, they give me plenty of new material that I can’t obtain for myself to work on in my own projects. It’s almost a complete win-win-win situation.”
“You sure know how to candy-coat your objectives.”
“Naturally.” he crossed his arms and leaned back even further on his seat, “How about it, would you like me to take in Gungnir along my upgrade projects as well?” he added as an afterthought.
“Don’t you even dare think of trying to alter Gungnir!” Tesla snapped back swiftly.
“Aw, why not?” Aurion asked in a mock disappointed tone, “The Lightning Bowgun concept has already been drawn out.”
“You even plotted out an upgrade plan without prior notice!” Tesla breathed out exasperatedly as she flicked away a strand of hair in front of her eyes, “Sorry. But unlike Vita-chan, I don’t really think that I need another mode for my device… though I must admit that’s an interesting prospect.”
“Well, should you change your mind, what about you Gungnir?” he addressed Tesla’s device, which was currently in its pendant form around her neck “It’s interesting isn’t it?”
[Ja.] replied a mechanical voice.
“Still talking to other people’s devices arbitrarily, huh, Ossan?’
“I don’t remember there being a ban on that matter.”
“…………………..”
“Ran out of things to say?” asked Aurion while closing his eyes and leaning back further to make his chair stand on its hind legs.
Tesla only sighed and closed her eyes, “No… I just recompiled and reanalyzed the recent events…” she opened her eyes and stared at him perceptively “You sure have changed a lot… Ossan…”
“Oh?” Aurion’s eyes opened slowly, revealing an unnervingly analytical expression in his eyes, lowering his chair back to four legs again. “Would you mind sharing your observations then, Tesla…?”
The shift of atmosphere between the two was so quick it was positively frightening. But it wasn’t one of hostility, but one of a match of wits, Tesla’s tone changed accordingly, losing its playful cadence and being replaced by an almost emotionless and systematic note, “I had my doubts in the past, but now I’ve confirmed it after talking with you…” she crossed her legs and leaned forward, “You’re an excellent actor, but I can’t be fooled so easily… Compared to how you were for almost a decade ago until recently…” she rested her elbow on her thigh and placed her chin on her palm, her half-lidded eyes glinting strangely. Her posture and expression radically changed how she seemed to be. A while ago, she looked just like any playful teenager. Now, she looked a few years more mature than she appears with her aloof posture, “You seem to be more… human…”
“Hmm…” Aurion’s own expression changed severely as well; his eyes losing their usual roguish glint and being replaced by bottomless dark orbs devoid of emotion, “And…?”
“I always observed you whenever I can…” Tesla continued, “In the past, I always felt something abnormal with you… You were undecipherable… I couldn’t figure you out no matter how hard I tried.” Her other hand lifted up to twirl a stray lock of her hair, her eyes gazing sidewards to it, “It was a little unnerving, to be honest… To think you were able to hide so much under that cheerful mask of yours so well… You also managed to do some crazy stuff without batting an eyelash… There was some strange pressure there…” her eyes slid back to stare against his, “Now… it all just disappeared… I’ve never seen you so completely blithe like this. Not to mention talking openly about being concerned about anyone… Nor do you seem to be planning something all the time anymore… Simply put,” she flicked back the lock of hair she was holding, “it’s no longer you.”
Aurion remained expressionless during the stoic tirade, “In the end, what are you trying to prove?” Aurion asked coldly, his voice a fear-provoking whisper. “That I’m a different person?”
“Precisely…” Tesla replied just as frostily. Her free hand extended leisurely, her finger pointed at Aurion’s face, “You… are not Aurion Dauer. Who are you and what did you do to Ossan?”
“Ha…” Aurion’s eyes closed as a crazed grin spread across his face, “Hahaha…” his body slowly began shaking, “Hahahahahaha!” he later laughed out loud. His almost demented laughter was terrifying to hear; continuing for several more seconds, with Tesla, unfazed, only observing silently.
“So I was right, after all…” Tesla whispered.
Aurion’s laughter slowly abated, “My, my… You’re too smart for your own good, little blue lady…” he replied as his eyes opened slowly, revealing his irises currently glowing with a bright azure glow, “Indeed, I am not the Aurion Dauer that you knew…” his eyes narrowed, “And now that you know…” the glow grew brighter as he stood up.
“Ugh.” Tesla tensed as a cobalt glow began surrounding the area around her body, she tried shifting only to find out she was held in place by the blue field. “Kisama…” she directed a glare at him.
He stood up, “Hmm… What to do now that my cover’s blown…?” he continued as his right hand slowly reached towards her head… “A reckless, reckless move, Tesla…” When his hand finally hovered over her head, he sighed and patted her head warmly, “Cut!” he declared jovially, as if the past few seconds never happened. The blue field broke away as well. Then, the two burst into an infectious round of laughter.
The stifling pressure that was building up vanished as if it was never there. Tesla’s serious expression reverted back to her bright and cheery smiling appearance. She raised her head to look at Aurion’s face, winked and asked, “Well? Am I correct?”
“Yes, you are.” Aurion replied as he ruffled Tesla’s hair rather roughly, earning an indignant squeal from the blue-haired girl. “Since when did you notice?”
“Since a few months ago…” Tesla grabbed Aurion’s wrist with both her hands and lifted his hand off her head. She then began fixing her hair with her fingers, “But really, what caused the sudden change? Ossan acting and feeling like a normal person is NOT normal.”
“Well…” Aurion sat back on his chair, “Let’s just say there’s a heavy weight that been lifted from my shoulders… So I can relax completely now.”
“Won’t you dive into specifics?” Tesla asked as she uncrossed her legs and began swinging them alternately.
“Not now. I’m still not in the mood to tell.” Aurion replied mildly. He smirked, “Disappointed?”
“I see…” Tesla acknowledged and jumped off the table, landing on the ground with her arms outstretched, she turned to face him, clasping her hands behind her back, “And no, I’m not disappointed. I like Ossan better this way.” She then smiled vibrantly.
“Heh.” Aurion smiled back, “Reasons?”
“Several.” Tesla raised her hands and ticked off her fingers on her right, “First, you’re now definitely easier to annoy.”
Aurion’s left eyebrow twitched once, “So that’s a good thing, now?!”
Ignoring him, Tesla continued, “Second, you’re easier to figure out. With this, I can follow the kind of game you’re playing easier and beat you more in our strategy games.”
“I see…” he stroked his chin, “Rather selfish reasons so far, though.”
“Of course.” Tesla winked and stuck out her tongue before continuing, “Third, Signum and the others also noticed, though at varying degrees. They’ve become noticeably more relaxed around you as well since you don’t seem to be always plotting something evil anymore.”
“That’s good.”
“Fourth, Hayate-chan and the other Aces would also surely notice or may have already noticed. And they’ll like you better with this.” She suddenly paused and tapped her chin in a thoughtful expression, “Oh, wait… That can’t be very good.”
“Is it now?” Aurion’s right eyebrow twitched this time.
“Fifth,” Tesla’s smile brightened, “I can trust you better even if you’re still a near constant liar.”
Aurion blinked once, and then a wide smile appeared on his face, “Glad to be of service.”
“And that wraps it up.” Tesla cheerfully concluded, spinning on her heel, “Thank you for letting me confirm my suspicions, Ossan.” She said as she walked towards the door. “I had fun.”
“Sure. By the way, do tell me if you’d want the upgrades to Gungnir later.” Aurion raised a hand for farewell.
Tesla stopped just as she was about to exit the door, looked back sideways and raised her left hand, smiling, “I'll think about it. Ja ne~, Ossan.” The sliding door closed.
“More human… ka?” Aurion whispered to himself. He then started chuckling, “Exactly how it turned out to be, don’t you think, Almaria?”
[Hai.] replied Almaria, his second device inserted at one of the holding fields. She is a one-of-a-kind Synchronization Device that he developed himself as a multi-function performance enhancer A.I. when attached to Reishiki. She takes the appearance of a cellphone [Finally, you have achieved your goal.]
“Aah…” Aurion smiled reflectively as he stared at the ceiling, “It was a long and painful journey… Having the very concept and understanding of human emotions taken from me…” he sighed as he raised his left arm, a picture of a group of people shown. His eyes lingered on the stunningly beautiful lavender-haired girl with kind, light-blue eyes; a girl with a stunning resemblance in appearance with Yagami Hayate. “I feel like a fool still doing this… but I’ve done it… I’m living again… Almaria… everyone…”
This time… Almaria the device didn’t reply. That is because she knew that she isn’t the one Aurion is referring to…
But really… Duraxyll 2… You sure know how to pick the proper location, Harlaown… he thought as he removed Schwertkreuz from his pocket, walking a short distance and depositing it to a holding field. The sister planet of Duraxyll… The planet that got ruined because of me… His eyes glowed again as the datapad Tesla delivered earlier flew to his hand. I guess this is for the best… I know everyone’s dead… but still… I want the chance to apologize… even if only to the planet itself… Next week…
A string of commands left his lips, “Reinitialize data recompilation and the installation of System XG-366. Ready backup system check, Z201. Set priority to rank AAA+. Notify me when recalibration is ready.”
[Acknowledged.]
In many ways, I’m stronger now. But I’m also weaker in just as many ways… I missed this feeling… He once again sat and leaned back his chair to make it stand on its two hind legs… It started ten years ago… And who would expect it to end that way? He held his head with his right hand while staring at the ceiling, smiling contentedly, Just being called-
“Otou~san!”
“GUWAH!!!”
*CRASH!**BANG!!**BLAG!!!* (Ouch…)
Hayate, who just entered, first looked a little surprised, but later succumbed into giggles at Aurion’s condition, lying on his back in a ridiculous pose with scattered paraphernalia around him. She walked quickly and kneeled beside his head, sporting the sweetest smile she can muster as she greeted him again, “Hello, Oji-chan!”
“Damn it all, Hayate!” Aurion grunted painfully as his eyes opened to glower at his niece… and recently, daughter figure during some rare occasions (I’d much rather call it dependent on Hayate’s whims), such as now. “I told you not to call me that impulsively! You’ll give people weird ideas!”
“Bleh~.” Hayate stuck out her tongue playfully, “Sorry. Need some help getting up, Oji-chan?”
“No.” Aurion replied as he levitated back upright, bringing along the rest of the stuff that fell down. “And you, little girl.” he laid his hand on Hayate’s head, hard. “You’re going to get detention.”
“E-eh?” Hayate looked intimidated, acting the part properly.
“I’ve recently finished the Bookmark System on the Tome. And you are to memorize and master all of its functions within three days!”
“EH?!” Hayate squealed in protest. “But Oto-”
Aurion quickly lowered his face directly in front of hers and gave his most intimidating frown, “Call me that again right now and I’ll force you to learn how to use the new system within the hour!”
Hayate moaned in protest, making an endearing doe-eyed expression, “But you told me I can call you that when we’re alone!”
“I never said anything of the sort.” Aurion countered tersely. “Just on some rare occasions. RARE, get it?!”
The girl only pouted childishly and looked down, “Hai.”
Heh… Oh yes, I really am weaker now… Aurion sighed inwardly as he finally smiled at her. But I wouldn’t have it any other way.
Now that was one long piece to read, but it was well worth it. The OCs might take a bit getting used to, but i am not complaining. I will confess - you had me fooled with the part when Aurion turned "evil" ... curse you !
I like the pacing - it is laid back without being draggy and the character interactions are fun to read. The writing is good and there are not any immediate flaws i can notice, aside from your habit of calling Hayate Mistress of the Knight sky on few occasions :p ("now the loyal guardians of the Mistress of the Knight Sky" for example).
Liking the implied Yuuno x Nanoha as well ... would be fun to see where this goes and whether Vivio would get a papa eventually :heh:
Was a fun read, good job. Moar please ?
Now or Never
Pairing: Signum/Shamal (shoujo ai)
Summary: There had always been something between them but destiny had never allowed this blurry connection to be anything more. (pre-A's)
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4012124/1/Now_or_never
A nice Signum/Shamal bit, albeit I did have some reservations about Vita 'pretending' to be arrogant (I'm of the opinion that before becomming Hayate's knight, she was arrogant, makes the development more fun).
Now that was one long piece to read, but it was well worth it. The OCs might take a bit getting used to, but i am not complaining. I will confess - you had me fooled with the part when Aurion turned "evil" ... curse you !
He had all of us going for a minute. Heck, I was beginning to worry for my OC's safety. :uhoh:
ghazghkull
2008-01-15, 03:57
Now or Never
Pairing: Signum/Shamal (shoujo ai)
Summary: There had always been something between them but destiny had never allowed this blurry connection to be anything more. (pre-A's)
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4012124/1/Now_or_never
Just recently managed to look at it earlier this evening. It looked good. As for Vita pretending, not likely. She was always hot headed and brash, even in StrikerS, despite living with Hayate and being around Nanoha all the time mellowing her out a bit. But all in all, Vita's hot-headed as ever, so I really don't see how she's any different.
Good characterization of Vita however.
Aaron008R
2008-01-15, 05:22
Also updated: Nightengale's OC stories
I'm telling everybody. Read Nighty's EPIC Saga of Saga now, with all your strength!!!:D:D:D
@krisslanza:
Vivio smiled happily at her mother when she came home from high school cheer leading practice. "Fate-mama! I brought you some flowers!" To her mother's surprise, she was suddenly handed a dozen flowers of a mixed variety.
"Thank you, Vivio." Fate looked at the present with interest. "Wow, they're lovely. Whatever for?"
Vivio clasped both her hands behind her back and rocked on her heels. "Wellll, I know how much you hate loaning your car and I just had to have it and I just wanted to say thank you." She smiled again, eyes sparkling. "Fate-mama, you're the best!"
"Aw, come here sweetheart!" Fate melted at the words and hugged her almost eighteen year old daughter. "You made my day with these." Looking back at them, she couldn't but smile again. "I'll put them in a vase and keep them in the living room."
"And," Vivio went on, following her. "I want to let you know I did all the chores too. I even did the shopping for the week. I thought since I was out I'd do it for you."
"Thank you!" Fate arranged the flowers.
"I'm home!" Nanoha's voice came up as she walked through the door. "Fate-chan what on earth happened to your car? It looks like a trailer hitch got intimate with it?"
Fate went still as Vivio slowly started backing away. "So yeah, um, I'll just... go to my room now."
"Vi...vi...oh..." Fate muttered slowly, turning her head at the same pace.
Vivio ran. Fast. So fast she almost made use of her flying training. Scrambling down the stairs and almost falling, pushing past people who she normally saluted, and out into the open field of section six. Just as soon as she thought she was free, a yellow binding spell tripped her and froze her in place.
Hovering in the air, her feet kicked frantically while trying to get traction again. "Help! Heeeeeeelp!"
Fate descended in front of her and patted Bardiche across her palm. "Can't no one help you now little missy..."
~**~
Vivio rubbed her butt ruefully, light tears in her eyes. "I'm too old for this, Nanoha-mama."
"Now now," Nanoha smiled at her after the spanking. Be happy Fate-mama dragged you here for me to do it."
"But still..." Sitting down, she winced. "Ow, you spanked me too hard."
"Did not," Nanoha nudged her. "You know I didn't." With a wink, she smiled and looked out the window towards the training ground where Fate was giving giving her Advanced students a personal training session. Yellow lighting was flying thick around them and she was sure she could hear the faint screams for mercy. "I wrecked her car once."
"No way, really?" Vivio looked highly interested. "When"
Nanoha thought back. "I think I was about to turn twenty-two at the time. I was fighting a 'droid and blew it up in the air. A piece fell onto Fate's car."
"That's hardly a wreck, Mama."
"And then the entire 'droid fell on it... and blew up." She looked at Vivio, who was grinning ear to ear. "I think that's the only time I was scared Fate-mama was going to hit me. We didn't speak for almost two days."
"How did it get better?"
"I almost broke her neck while she strangled me." Nanoha let Vivio panic for a few seconds before laughing. "Long story, but after that we were okay again. I bought her a new car. It lasted almost three years. The one she got when she was pregnant with you lasted a good five years because she couldn't work. Oh those were good times.
Vivio's interest was perked again. "What was I like when I was little."
"You was a little angel." Nanoha put an arm around Vivio and, much to the teen's distress, kissed her temple.
"Ew."
"Aw, you used love when I kissed you!"
"I'm grown now."
"Well in that case," Nanoha held her daughter to her tightly. "Let me tell you about the night you was conceived."
"NO!"
"Oh it was fantastic," Nanoha continued, holding the squirming girl who was frantically trying to get away. Knowing full well she was freaking her out, she continued. "Candles, soft music, sexy adult lingerie..."
"MAMA! I'm going to throw up!"
"Nyahahaha!"
Talk about still being horny after all those years...:heh:
Quite entertaining, still.:D
Though some of the 'was' should be 'were'...:heh:
Remember that old teaser I posted back when Rune was a un-named blonde smoking girl? I felt bored and rather then actually write this out before hand... I felt like re-writing that 'teaser'. This is a total freewrite, why do I do this? ... Because.
The light sighs in a clearly feminine tone, it runs a hand through psuedo-transparent silver hair to brush away a bang obscuring half its face. It casts its mis-matched eyes about the darkness of the room, a glint of red is reflected in its own self-casted light in a scar running down its right silver eye. The woman of light digs into her jacket's pocket as her right hand habitually flicks open, then closes, a lighter.
"So..." the light cracks in a pained tone, "Someone actually bothered to learn history?" a non-descript white pack is withdrawn from her jacket, "And someone bothered to learn this particular history? Couldn't you just look out the window?" she gestures vaguely about her, not really aware if the room has windows or not, a white stick is flicked out of the pack as she continues, "But I digress... I guess someone who was involved in a bulk of the fighting would be the best person to explain this. And one of the few who didn't die when that little 'accident' happened."
She sighed and withdrew the white stick from the matching pack, the stick went into her mouth as the pack disappeared back into her jacket pockets. The lighter flicked open and lit as it burned the stick, a wisp of smoke appearing. Another flick and the lighter disappeared into her sleeves. A light shaking of her head causes the bang to once more fall and cover her blue eye from view.
"I suppose we'll get introductions out of the way first. I guess back in the days... My rank would be lieutenant, and I was in charge of the 367th Ground Battalion. Don't bother going looking them up, they're all dead anyway." the woman spat bitterly and took a drag from her cancer stick, "I'm also a Enforcer, by the name of Rune Juril. I've had the... Pleasure of meeting and being acquainted with the Aces, I didn't know them well... Maybe except Testarossa, but merely since she was around so much." Rune waved her hand dismissively, "Not that it matters anymore. Well now that introductions are done... I suppose you'll want to know how the 'great Time and Space Administration Bureau' has been reduced to ashes and we're at war with ourselves as Varista rebuilds, laughing at our misfortune?"
Rune laughs bitterly and then quickly she sobers and her visible eye narrows, the red glint is noted again in the scar.
"It's a long story. Don't fall asleep."
Whoot. Freewrite.
Like I said in the OC thread, a little confusing at first, but very interesting really quickly!:D Moar? :3
Generations Comment, Fuck Yes Hayate action! Finay a story besides Acadmey days which focuses on Hayate, and is well written. Does the Author of Acadmey Days post here anyway?
Thanks.:D
And it's Academy Blues.:heh: And no, Daishi Prime doesn't go here.:(
Oh, and don't expect too much from mine.:heh: I'm still far, far away from Daishi Prime's and Satashi's levels when it comes to this...:heh:
It is called Academy Blues (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3158516/1/Academy_Blues) by Daishi Prime (http://www.fanfiction.net/u/829343/Daishi_Prime). Hope that helps ;)
P.S. It's a really good read. Some of it requires back story of it's predecesorPath of Vengeance (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2845766/1/Path_of_Vengeance) to learn about certain aspects of the story, which I won't tell here, so that it doesn't spoil anything ;) although mind you I skipped that one :heh:.
P.P.S. Here's also the side story for it: Academy Blues Side Stories (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3510860/1/Academy_Blues_Side_Stories)
P.P.P.S. FINALLY A PAGE CLAIM!! XD
:nod::nod::nod:
Some of the most AWESOME Nanoha fics EVER.:D:D:D
I heard those were really good, but I've never read because I, for some reason, don't really like reading Hayate that much ( which is odd because I love writing with her)
I guess those are two different things...:heh: And she wasn't really fleshed out properly even in canon.:frustrated:
^^ XD
Random Post of the day goes to Satashi.
Urgh, going to have to get off my lazy ass and start writing again... haven't touched my fics for ages.... TT
I was wondering where you've gone.:p
How're the fics going?:D
(You have my gratitude for pointing out ef: A Tale of Memories to me.:D Damn, that was EPIC! XD)
Just a Q:
Can we post snippets of planned works/WIPs here? from snip/snap quotes/ficlets, to even OPs? Like what we do in OC...
And Also
@ thread: can anyone rate my Nanoha Works?
@ Satashi: PAY UP YOUR REVIEW DUES!!!
It was done in the past FF thread, right? Why not?:D
Now that was one long piece to read, but it was well worth it. The OCs might take a bit getting used to, but i am not complaining. I will confess - you had me fooled with the part when Aurion turned "evil" ... curse you !
:eek::eek::eek:
This took me by surprise!:bow: (But then, I know several others aside from you {like Liingo, stormturmoil, Tk3997} who read Academy Blues, which was an OC galore...:heh:)
Thanks!:D
I like the pacing - it is laid back without being draggy and the character interactions are fun to read. The writing is good and there are not any immediate flaws i can notice,
Good to know my efforts payed off...:D:D:D
aside from your habit of calling Hayate Mistress of the Knight sky on few occasions :p ("now the loyal guardians of the Mistress of the Knight Sky" for example).
Only to be struck by a Homonym Bustah!:eek::eek::eek:
Thanks for the heads-up! Will edit them NAO!:upset:
Liking the implied Yuuno x Nanoha as well ... would be fun to see where this goes and whether Vivio would get a papa eventually :heh:
Evangelion XGouki is currently working on the date.:D I think we can expect it within the week.:D:D:D The current snippets show much promise.:3
Was a fun read, good job. Moar please ?
Thanks a lot!:D:D:D Will get to do more later. But I'm currently busy right now...:heh: Slow updates are to be expected.:heh:
He had all of us going for a minute. Heck, I was beginning to worry for my OC's safety. :uhoh:
Got you too?:heh:
:D:D:D
Thanks for the comments, everybody.:D This got me more motivated to finish the fic.:D:bow:
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Just a Q:
Can we post snippets of planned works/WIPs here? from snip/snap quotes/ficlets, to even OPs? Like what we do in OC...
And Also
@ thread: can anyone rate my Nanoha Works?
@ Satashi: PAY UP YOUR REVIEW DUES!!!
All fanfics are welcome here, be they short snips, a few lines, teasers, trailers, you name it. Actually stuff like that is encouraged. People seem to respond a lot better if you give small teasers to grab their attention and then throw the fic in their face :heh:
Pay up my review dues? @_@
I can pass you the link to my reference link in the OC thread that lists all my present work, but those works aren't really friendly to people outside of the OC thread since they're set at least 2-3 years from where I want the beginning of the fic to start.. That coupled with the fact that I haven't written nice backgrounds for my OC's since they're going to get explained in the said fic that I'm writing.. We're going to have a lot of confused people..:heh:
Blame the distractions for the lack of writing.... The internets is God for the writer, yet a tool for procratination at the same time...;_;
It doesn't' matter; fanfiction is fanfiction. I'm archiving everyone here's works, having OCs has nothing to do with the fact people want easy access to stuff. Link me to your OC page, I'll try and work something out with it. I'll PM you if I need stuff about it or have questions :P
All fanfics are welcome here, be they short snips, a few lines, teasers, trailers, you name it. Actually stuff like that is encouraged. People seem to respond a lot better if you give small teasers to grab their attention and then throw the fic in their face :heh:
Pay up my review dues? @_@
Noted... will start posting at work.
you promised me an FF.net review- i think.
Noted... will start posting at work.
you promised me an FF.net review- i think.
I did? Which story? :D
LOL You wrote that in a very short space of time didn't you? LOL XD
Actually that took a long time. It also involved dinner, some AMV watching, WoW, cleaning my office/bathroom/bedroom and laundry...I would have a lot more if not for those things distracting me.
But most of all, blame mercurianangel for being so much fun to talk to on AIM :heh:
Evangelion Xgouki
2008-01-15, 11:58
Evangelion XGouki is currently working on the date.:D I think we can expect it within the week.:D:D:D The current snippets show much promise.:3
Yea yea...I'm working on it :heh:. Apparently I seem to be getting known for writing WAFF fics and a few of the Outer Cadians thought it would be great to 'volunteer' me to write a little side fic :p.
PS: Ah yes, I also have an OC. Let me know if you want a link Satashi :)
I did? Which story? :D
AlternateS I
*runs towards LART shelter*
I'll be back!
krisslanza
2008-01-15, 12:28
Satashi-sama promises nothing. Even if Satashi-sama says a promise, Satashi-sama is always too busy to keep them! :P
Since I'm sure Satashi-sama may have mentioned a looking at my own writings is in order...
...
Typing without using 'he' or 'she' is very hard.
EDIT:
Whoops knew I forgot something :heh:
@Aaron:
Danke. :D
For my own curiousity, what was confusing? I of course would have none as I know... Mostly everything (Minus things we haven't really pinned down...), I'd be assuming the confusion is on exactly what is going on, ne?
But of course I'll write MOAR. Much MOAR. Arc-en-Ciel: Ashes unto Dust is essentially me aiming for some level of epic :nod:
Of course how long until I write moar depends on if I decide to write the whole thing in a journal (like School of Lyrical) or free-write it on the computer. Both have their own problems (Journal results in slower writing as I have less freetime Mon-Thurs, but using the computer means I can't do any writing Friday-Sunday)
Yea yea...I'm working on it :heh:. Apparently I seem to be getting known for writing WAFF fics and a few of the Outer Cadians thought it would be great to 'volunteer' me to write a little side fic :p.
PS: Ah yes, I also have an OC. Let me know if you want a link Satashi :)
If you have fics posted, link me to the fic itself, and your OC profile so I can put it together for you. Please include: Name of story, links to chapters, brief summary, Rating, a main couple if you feel like it's needed, and any comments- if any- you'd like to add. If you need them posted, feel free to do them here :3
AlternateS I
*runs towards LART shelter*
I'll be back!
I'll try as soon as I can ^^
Satashi-sama promises nothing. Even if Satashi-sama says a promise, Satashi-sama is always too busy to keep them! :P
Since I'm sure Satashi-sama may have mentioned a looking at my own writings is in order...
...
Typing without using 'he' or 'she' is very hard.
T_T that's mean. :p I'm just not good with OC stories because I'm all "wait, who is that...? What's going on...? I don't know anyone here... @_@;;;!!!!"
and call me "He" or "she" whichever you want, I'll go with either.
Edit: Woot woot!
krisslanza
2008-01-15, 13:24
How many page claims have you gotten Satashi-sama? Really? :uhoh: You have some crazy knack for getting them :eyespin:
And well... I do my best to describe OCs! The only thing you don't know about Rune is like... Her full past! ... Because I haven't gotten that far yet. I hate making bios :heh:
How many page claims have you gotten Satashi-sama? Really? :uhoh: You have some crazy knack for getting them :eyespin:
And well... I do my best to describe OCs! The only thing you don't know about Rune is like... Her full past! ... Because I haven't gotten that far yet. I hate making bios :heh:
A lot :3 I check the forums at times: 8:00, 10:00 , 12:00-1:00, 3:00, 6:00 and constantly when I'm at home lol. Those are my break times at work :3
Haha, that's kinda helpful :p make a bio so I can link to it XD
Oh, and Saint X, I read that chapter actually but never reviewd lol. I recall that I liked it, specially Yuuno.
edit: Teaser for upcoming chapter of Saved by the Bell:
Fate gets "The talk"
krisslanza
2008-01-15, 13:46
*Shudder of utter horror* The dreaded... "Talk". No one ever looks forward to that :uhoh:
Aww but Bios are booooooring. :eyespin: But I guess it is one of those nessecarry evils... I'll put finishing Rune's bio 3rd on my list of things to do. 1 is School of Lyrical and 2 is Arc-en-Ciel: Ashes unto Dust :P (To a point. I think I can skim by a few chapters without her past... To far back anyway)
Evangelion Xgouki
2008-01-15, 13:48
If you have fics posted, link me to the fic itself, and your OC profile so I can put it together for you. Please include: Name of story, links to chapters, brief summary, Rating, a main couple if you feel like it's needed, and any comments- if any- you'd like to add. If you need them posted, feel free to do them here :3
Got the link to my meager OC profile right here (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1252064&postcount=15777).
Special Copypasta from the OC, a (good) crack OCxSubaru idea that i'm pushing for my next Fanfic after AlternateS I- which i'm planning already.
- several ideas are from already established dimensions shows, so bear with it.
- it's just a sample anyway, so far
Kyla was adamant about the evaluation of MD6, well she did had a tendency of testing people under her command, especially newbies- the Aces had a taste of that before, and now their forwards were being evaluated, not just on their overall capabilities, but also on how much they have learned from their teachers. The Silvana had now landed and was now sitting peacefully on the shore of the lake, the ruins Kyla had designated as the proving grounds a few miles away. In addition to aboveground structures, the ruins had miles of catacombs and tunnels, perfect for such proving- a great contrast to the Aces' own proving grounds, which was artificial, the AX grounds were all natural.
"Okay... Here is the drill, Stars, Lightning, you go with a designate from Cross, since those two have already went thru this, they will help you in any way- think of the arrangement as a Velkan Trinity Unit."
The forwards look at the two members of the brand new Cross Squad- which was formed only yesterday. They have been introduced that day, but today was the day that they would get to see them in combat- they have only vaguely heard of the events surrounding the Key Devices, their keepers and the relation of all of those towards the Aces. Subaru was the only one being pessimistic- well that first encounter had knocked the image of Ashton in.
Minutes later they were now split up- The Stars had Ashton, since that group lacked a support mage while the Lightning had Rurika, since that lacked a ranged attack mage. Back at the Silvana, tensions were running high.
"I still can't believe that something strange has stirred up near Kagami Base..." Kyla could only sigh as she looked at the monitor, the two teams well ahead, still looking for clues. "And sorry for asking your members when it was supposed to be us looking."
"Don't worry admiral." Nanoha replied. "This will be a good opportunity to let them learn something new- from you."
"I'll take that." Kyla replied, and the turned to another screen. "Chacha, How's things up there?"
Overhead, Chacha was fully clad in her barrier robe, scanning her surroundings.
"Nothing over here..."
"Good... Any news over on your end, Commander Windbloom?"
Another screen opened, revealing the newest commanding member of AX, the expatriated Queen Mashiro of the still besiged Planet Earl.
"Nothing over here..." the queen turned commander replied. "Not even the Kagatsuchi's sensors have picked up anything."
Meanwhile, the Stars have stopped to rest, to the advice of Ashton and to the annoyance of Subaru.
"You know, we don't have to waste time..." Subaru almost whined.
"Subaru, at least let him help up with this... he's been thru this before you know." Tea replied, somehow supporting.
"I know that Nakajima, but we need to rest- and Miss Lanstar's correct, we must rest- since there is nothing up here, we might as well go into the catacombs to look." Ashton replied.
Meanwhile at Lightning, both Caro and Ruri sense something.
"Do you feel that guys?" the archer asked.
Caro and Erio nodded together.
The suddenly, Chacha and the Silvana's sensors spot something...
'Massive drone swarm detected...'
- to be continued -
Previously...
'Massive drone swarm detected...'
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"Chacha, you coordinate with Nanoha and the others and intercept as many as you can!" Kyla then ordered.
Then two screens opened, one bearing Commander Mashiro's face and another bearing two more familiar faces, Kha and Yuuno- both of which have been looking up north- Kha's trinity is in the background resting.
"What's happening over there?" all three people asked.
"We are in deep trouble... come here at your best speed..."
"Roger... We'll be there as soon as we can..." Yuuno replied.
"I'll send Arika, Nina and reinforcements ahead..." Mashiro replied.
Both screens signed off and Kyla ordered the bridge to be lowered and the engines spooled for flight. In the meantime, the aces have already joined Chacha and were intercepting the swarm. Meanwhile, the ground forces are also being swarmed upon, with AMF at full blast, well making them fight hard- well the non-Dei types that is.
We tune our cameras to Ashton who had just finished retrieving a dagger at the end of metal line. The drones surrounding them were sliced into multiple pieces. Subaru and Teana were somewhat amazed- they were always finding ways to beat AMF but his weapon passed thru them like a hot knife thru butter.
"This is not the time to be amazed... Praesulus..." Ash then spoke.
"Ready" the Key device responded.
But before he could do anything, a couple of rifts appeared, and out of them appeared humanoid figures in black, with large claws for hands. Ash reacted by throwing his line, but it got blocked- by a barrier.
In the sky, Chacha encountered the same thing- she can wreck AMF gadgets easily, but when the black drones appeared, she was having a hard time- and the aces could not do anything while the AMF strength was still strong.
"That's impossbile... Anti-Physical Shielding?" Kyla wondered. "This is bad. Minerva, take control... Vincent, wake up Gard and the others- i feel sorry for them pulling that all nighter hell week but we have to... I'm going up."
Back with the Stars, the two drones that cornered Ash were taken down by a couple of shots from Tea's device.
"These guys are much smarter than before, and even to manage doing two things- my guess is that the black drones shield against physical attacks and are weak to magic, while the gadgets buff up their defense, by using AMF to prevent magic from hitting them." Tea inferred- quick as always.
"So in the simplest sense..." Subaru then spoke, beating another black drone down with her bare force. "We need to beat the gadgets to beat these black drones..."
"Well that's good..." Ashton commented.
"And what do you mean by that genius?" Subaru retorted.
"This... Praesulus... Gap it!!!"
"Gap Generator..." the Key device on Ash's left hand responded, creating a field that nullified the AMF.
In the meantime, in dark space, someone had been watching the battle. and then, a computer display lit up.
The suddenly, all the destroyed drones returned, and the Gap Generator Spell turned off. And at that exact moment, CC, who was at the base, felt something wrong. In the meantime...
"This is nuts!!!" Ashton yelled. "We have to pull back!"
"Yeah, but where to?" Subaru asked.
"To the Catacombs..."
"That would be a good Idea..."
Previously...
"This is nuts!!!" Ashton yelled. "We have to pull back!"
"Yeah, but where to?" Subaru asked.
"To the Catacombs..."
"That would be a good Idea..."
---
Meanwhile, back at the dark space...
"Good Work X.A.N.A." a dark voice came in. "And it seems that you are enjoying mine and the doctor's toys too much... but remember to capture the Dei boy before he reacts..."
"As you wish..." the AI known as X.A.N.A. Zwei replied.
Back at the Lightning, All seemed well, despite the increased resurgence of drones- Ruri had known what the plan was and worked with Erio to achieve it- Caro had successfully used her Dragon Soul Summon and they were now beating drones left and right, Erio and Ruri (-neesan) on the ground while Caro and Friedrich above them.
But at the Stars however, things were not good. A stray shot manages to blow Tea away from the other two, forcing her to float to stabilize (assuming that she can manage it by now).
"Tea!" Subaru could only yell as she was being dragged by Ashton.
"Go! I'll manage!" Tea replied back.
"But..."
"Come on!" Ashton replied, pulling her towards the open catacomb entrance. "She'll be fine..."
And so the two disappeared, followed by a flood of gadgets and black drones. In the Catacombs, they began to run thru hundreds of feet of passage, trying to hide. and after a few minutes and a sudden abrupt turn later, they managed to hide in a chamber, drones passing along the chamber opening, not even knowing that they were inside.
"Phew..." Ashton sighed as he sat down.
"Tea..." Subaru could only say.
"She'll be okay..."
"Okay? How can you say that?!! You don't know her at all!"
"I'm sorry..." Ashton apologized, in a tone that was much nicer. "Typical of me... sorry... but you know we must have faith."
Back on the surface, just as Teana was about to be swarmed, a powerful blue bolt of light shot from out of nowhere, hitting all the drones around her. And as they exploded- or rather imploded into nothingness, she notices a girl wearing a similar type of robe armor to Chacha and holding a huge blue weapon- It was Arika.
At the Aces' end, a flash of blue and green around Chacha was all it took to swing the balance back.
"Scrya-niichan, Kha-niichan..." The Otome android exclaimed in relief.
Back in the catacombs...
"It won't be long before they can find us..." Ashton finally spoke as he stood up. "If worse comes to worse..."
He then remembers the words his Mother always told him.
"My child, there will come a time that you must react- even if it's against our will, you must do it... but you have to choose wisely... the person who you will react with, you must have feelings of comfort with- in short, you must be comfortable with the person you will eventually be with..."
"Da**..." Ashton could only say. "I guess we have no choice..."
"What choice?" Subaru wondered.
"Well... about that incident... sorry..."
"Okay..." Subaru could only reply- stunned.
"And actually, I know this is strange, but I feel somewhat comfortable around you..."
"Huh?" Subaru asked, a bit of embarrassment on her face. "What do you mean?"
"Well i meant what I-"
*CRASH*
One of the chamber walls gives way, presenting to the duo a gang of bloodthirsty droids, AMF and shields pumping at full power.
"Not Good..." Ashton could only mumble. "Arrgh! i don't care if she kills me later... i have to do this!"
"Do what?" Subaru manages to hear the last phrase.
"Give me your hand..."
"What?"
The drones crept slowly.
"What do you mean?" Subaru again asked and turned a bit irritated. "First of all you did 'that' to me yesterday and now you're asking me for my hand?"
"Come on... We'll die if we don't do this!"
"No way Gen-"
Ashton forcefully grabs Subaru's armed arm (Right) and clasps his hands together with hers. At that instant, Subaru's seal appears and a powerful wind began to blow, pushing the drones back. And at the same time, Ashton and Subaru could hear a song... a strange, yet familiar and warm song.
"What... wha-wha-what is this song..." Subaru could only think as she was being mesmerized by the tune, and also began to sing it. "This... feels... so... warm... and fuzzy."
By this time the wind began to cover the two of them. Thru the wind, Subaru noticed Ashton turning into glittering lights and those same lights surrounding her.
"This feeling... i can't explain it... but it feels soo nice..."
Minutes later, the wind began to die down, and thru it, Subaru's closed eyes open.
-- To be continued ---
Previously...
"This feeling... i can't explain it... but it feels soo nice..."
Minutes later, the wind began to die down, and thru it, Subaru's closed eyes open.
---
"This feeling..." Subaru could only think as she began to examine herself.
And she had changed- well "added" is the technical word for what happened. while the top had only sported minor changes- as in adding a small side mideal headband, from her legs to her chest sported some additional armoring (when i meant chest- yes, armor now protects her 'assets' :heh: ).
"Wow... this is..."
"Amazing..." Ashton's voice came in. "This feels strange..."
Subaru's wonder turned into shock as Ashton's ethereal image appeared behind and beside her- well blank naked for starters, making Subaru look down at his lower regions and hint a bit of red before speaking.
"Could you cover that zone please?" She asked, shyly pointing 'down there'.
"Sorry..." Ash replied, now limiting his visual size, now the area from his waist below is faded. "So this is how it feels..."
The drones still kept creeping slowly.
"So you're what?"
"I'm a weapon... a weapon that fuses with another person to be used... and right now you are also using my device as well..."
"Huh?" Subaru wondered as she looked at her left hand- there was Ashton's device... "Hey! what's the meaning of this anyway?!! how come we are now so close that i feel that you are groping me- no make it you are now officially groping me-AGAIN!!! Get off me!"
"Even if i wanted to, I can't... you have to die first before you can even unbind from me and that will make us both dead- with me following seconds later... so either you stick with me, or be dead..."
The drones are now in range, and the gadgets are now firing, the shots simply bouncing off the armor.
"Let's settle this later..." Subaru replied and readied her Revolver Knuckle. "Revolver... SHOOT!"
The armed device performed as always, but this time, it had recoil.
"WHAAAAAAA~" Subaru could only somewhat scream as her own shot pushed her back so much that Mach Caliber had to spin up just to keep her from impacting with the wall.
The shot however, hit the mark, carving a clear row thru the ranks of gadgets.
"Even with that kind of shot each time..." Ashton once appeared and spoke. "They're still too many... Lend me your left arm..."
"That again?!!"
"Please..."
"Either this or die right?"
Subaru reluctantly extended her left arm and the astral image then held the arm and it began to move- in the meantime.
"My hand... it feels soo warm... soo nice... i wish i can have this feeling on my body... wait... why am i enjoying this?!! a man is currently sharing my body!!! But... but..." Subaru could only think as Ash's Dei-type summoning seal appears on Subaru's outstrched palm.
"Arise Isis!!!" Ash's words then resounded.
The most powerful summon of Dei had now appeared in all her glory- once feared by even the aces, when it was still under the command of Illicida Mornay- Praesulus' previous keeper, when it was still a Sealed Device. AS soon as she appeared out of her seal, she dashed towards the nearest drone, kickslashing it out, followed by some slashes with her glass blades and some energy shots as well.
Back on the surface, the tide was now in favor of the mages.
-- To be continued --
As the Animus fought at capping one end of the chamber, Subaru and Ashton were trying to get out the other end. They managed to blow up just enough drones to pass thru, now speeding in one of the larger passages.
"We have to get out of here..."
"I know that... sheesh." Subaru could only say to the ethereal image as they sped on. "You know... you'll be..."
"Behind you!!!" her 'partner' now called, alerting her.
Subaru quickly spun around and managed to block a black drone. Moments later, flashes erupt from behind the drone and it goes down, revealing the Isis.
"Thanks..." Subaru then spoke.
"That makes us even..." Ashton replied.
"Oh no... that's not enough! you still owe me a lot of things."
"Okay... you can pound me later on. Isis, keep them busy while we get out of here..."
Meanwhile at the surface, the last of the drones was destroyed- nonetheless by Vita. Everyone now started to gather around Kyla, having called them.
"Okay, who's missing?" She began to ask. "21st, Lightning, Crystals (lol even Otome in the bureau have a team), White Valkyries, Me and Yuuno, Nanoha's group and Wokenritter... that leaves..."
"Admiral..." A tired Tea raised a hand. "Subaru and Mcdouglas are not yet here- they went into the catacombs to escape the drones."
Just as Tea finished her line, the ground began to shake. then, from a tunnel entrance near Tea, Subaru and Ashton (still together) sped out, followed seconds later by the summon. Kyla prompted quickly, standing infront of the entrance and already switched to Siege Mode. She quickly fired off her Chain Rocket attack hitting the sidewalls and blasting the incoming gadgets, making sure that those that survived will have a hard time digging themselves out. then moments later, a huge area of the catacombs caved in- destruction guaranteed. Kyla had to lower part of her body though to be able to swing the siege frame to block most of the heavy debris.
Everyone coughed at the dust that was created, and even some- like some of the white valkyries, had to float just to breathe easily. And when the dust settled...
"Subaru!" a relieved Tea approached him. "We thought we never see you again..."
"You can say that again Tea..."
"Where is Ashton?" Rurika then asked. "You were with him, right?"
"Yes and he's currently..."
Then as if on cue, Ashton's image appears behind Subaru, also coughing from the dust. All who were there we stunned.
"Stuck with her..." Ashton finished the line.
"Oh my..." Kyla, the Aces and Yuuno and Kha and the 21st could only gasp- it was like the time when the 'keys' were still 'seals'. "Just like Illicida..."
Then a whirlwind covers the fused pair and from it they emerge as separate people once again. and then moments later.
"See? we're just... fine..."
Subaru fainted right here and then, and almost hit the ground if it weren't for Ashton's quick hands.
-- Scenario End ---
*Shudder of utter horror* The dreaded... "Talk". No one ever looks forward to that :uhoh:
Specially