The Genderbending of Haruhi Suzumiya [Spoilers Aplenty]

[Pip]

Riiiight. I'll take that as "editjob".

[Aebliss]

It works fine this way... :heh:



My god some of the Gensou themes would be so epic here.

And I want more remixes of Itsumo no Fuukei. That track will be epic forever.


Anyway, more content:

Temporal


Every day, I climb this hill, and for some reason I never get tired of complaining about it. Whose idea was it to always build schools on top of large mountains?

Maybe one day I’ll have a heart attack from climbing this hill, and in the interest of public safety, they’ll have to level it off entirely, and rebuild the school where the hill used to be.

My noble sacrifice will not be in vain!

…

No point in thinking about strange things this early in the morning. And, as I think that, I arrive at the school gates.

And standing in front of the gates, talking to another girl with long hair, is Mikuru Asahina-san.

Even as the other girl goes inside the gates, Asahina-san continues to stand there. Is she waiting for someone? …Could she be waiting for me!?


Kyon: Asahina-saaaaan!

Mikuru: Ah! Kyon-kun! I was waiting for you!


She says with a slight blush. I’m so flattered, Asahina-san. I won’t keep you waiting ever again. I’ll get up at four in the morning from now on and wait for you instead.


Kyon: It’s rare that I see you this early, Asahina-san. What’s up?

Mikuru: Kyon-kun… did you notice anything strange at all yesterday? Around the time when we were talking?

Something strange? No, not that I remember.

Asahina-san gets closer to me, giving furtive looks left and right. From this distance, I can smell the sweet scent of her hair.


Mikuru: My superiors contacted me yesterday, about classified information—um, I’ll try to put it in simpler terms… yesterday afternoon, there was a state of temporal flux in the clubroom.

Kyon: Temporal… flux?

Mikuru: Um, I’m sorry, I really can’t explain much, but for about fifteen minutes, our clubroom, um, was occupied by something.

Kyon: Something classified?

Mikuru: …Yes.


She looks away from me like she can’t think of much else to say. Also, I feel angry glares on my back from passing male students.

I better wrap this conversation up quickly and get inside before I’m lynched! Sorry, Asahina-san, but I can’t hold you close and comfort you here.

Hmm…

[DECISION POINT HERE]

1) Think it had something to do with last month?
2) Leave it me. If there’s any trouble, I’ll protect you.
IF RoutesClear >= 3, THEN
3) So, uh, Asahina-san, who were you talking to?



The Deep Wounds Inside


Kyon: Think it had something to do with last month?

Mikuru: …!


At my response, she abruptly turns around.


Mikuru: Kyon-kun… can we please not talk about that?

Kyon: …Eh? Wait, no, Asahina-san, I didn’t mean to bring that…

Mikuru: It’s fine!


She turns around and flashes me a smile.


Mikuru: I’ll see you in the clubroom later today, Kyon-kun.

Kyon: Ah, right, bye.


And she walks off without another word. I get the feeling I screwed up royally somewhere.

Ah well. Better get to class.

How much do you want to bet Haruhi will have made it there before me again? The odds are, unfortunately, against me.

A thousand to one in her favor!


False Bravado

Kyon: Leave it me. If there’s any trouble, I’ll protect you!


Her face lights up immediately.


Mikuru: Really? Thanks a lot, Kyon-kun!


Really. Even though, the last time we were in big trouble, I seem to remember cowering in a corner while Koizumi and Nagato did all the work.


Mikuru: Even if you’re nowhere as strong as Koizumi-kun or Nagato-san, I really, really appreciate it.

Wh--?

What is that supposed to mean? I never thought I’d hear something like that from Asahina-san’s sweet red lips!

Haruhi has been a bad influence on her. That must be it.

I sigh.


Kyon: Can I at least walk you to class?

Mikuru: Ah, um, no, that’d be… what if Suzumiya-san were to see us?

Kyon: Ah, right, yeah, good point.


And with that, she waves and goes towards the school building, ready for class.

Ah well. Guess I should be going too.

How much do you want to bet Haruhi will have made it there before me again? The odds are, unfortunately, against me.

A thousand to one in her favor!



My Friend

Kyon: So, uh, Asahina-san, who were you talking to?


Asahina-san looks surprised.


Mikuru: Ah, that was my friend, Tsuruya-san. You remember her?

Kyon: How could I forget?


Tsuruya-san is one of the more interesting people I’ve ever met.


Mikuru: I told her to go on ahead, since I was waiting for you… ah! Look, she’s up there!

I look where Asahina-san is pointing. Waving down at us out of a second floor window is a girl with long hair. At this distance, I can’t really see what she looks like, but I’m sure it’s

[I]Ripple.

Huh? What was that just now? It felt like something from a dream long forgotten, or something I should have remembered…

…What?

The world has, all of a sudden, been suffused with a deep myrtle.

Nothing moves. The world is dark. I can’t hear anything.

What the hell is this?


???: …?


Did I just hear…?


???: …on-kun?


What? I hear a voice…


Mikuru: Kyon-kun? Are you okay?

Kyon: Ah, uh, yeah, I’m fine.


Everything’s back. That was strange.

…Am I losing it?


Ah, whatever, it’s all fine. Don’t look at me with eyes like that, Asahina-san, I’m fine. Just a momentary lapse in sanity. Perfectly normal.


Kyon: Should I walk you to class?

Mikuru: Ah, um, no, that’s fine. Suzumiya-san might see…

Kyon: …Yeah, good point.


And with that, she waves and goes towards the school building, ready for class.

Ah well. Guess I should be going too.

How much do you want to bet Haruhi will have made it there before me again? The odds are, unfortunately, against me.

A thousand to one in her favor!


If you don't know what "myrtle" is, look it up. The more you know~!

Okay, sorry for the delay in commenting, I've been out of this thread for a while. This is getting really interesting~! ^^ I look forward to reading more.

[Aebliss]

One reason I hate doing the rewrites is B-T's incredibly poor use of English and the concept of "flow".

Another is that they're no fun unless I have free reign with Haruki.

The fourth batter managed to hit a double; while the fifth batter took advantage of an error from Kunikida, and our opponents ended up taking the first and third; the sixth batter scored a second run by hitting the ball out into the right field; the seventh batter hit the ball towards third base, the ball was picked up and quickly thrown home by Tsuruya-senpai, tagging the runner out, which ended the first inning.

The score is now 2-0. I’d never have thought we could fight this valiantly, but it gives me even more of a headache. Just hurry up and let them score ten runs so we can go home already!


At the start of the second inning, our fifth to seventh batters - my brother, Itsuko, and Kunikida – all struck out one after the other. Ladies and gentlemen, we have already entered the second half of the inning before we could even take a breath.

Our opponent seems to have identified the outfield as our main weakness, and it became obvious that they were targeting the ball towards that area. Every time they did, Taniguchi and I would run frantically towards the outfield, trying to catch the ball, but our success rate was only about 10%. As a result, we’re both exhausted.

It was a small price to pay, though. This way Asahina-senpai doesn’t have get himself hurt by chasing after the ball. He looks so cute even when he’s running away.

And so, our opponent scored five runs in this inning, giving them a score of 7-0. Just three more runs and it'll be over. We should be able to wrap this up next inning, and I can leave.


It’s now the first half of the third inning, our turn for offense.

Tsuruya-senpai, who was up next, kept hitting the ball foul. He seems like a very energetic person, but in the end, he could only hit the ball straight up, which of course landed in the catcher’s glove.

He tapped his helmet with the bat and said, “Man, that sure is hard! Just hitting the ball was already tough enough.”

Haruki frowned, seeming to be in deep thought. That’s never a good sign.

"Hmm, looks like we'll have to use… that…" Haruki murmured, and slowly walked to the umpire, saying, "Time out!"

He then walked over to me. “Okay Kyon, let’s go.”

“What? What you do you have in mind?”

Haruki grinned.


------


“No.”

Was my curt response.

Haruki had carried me behind the bleachers, and is now holding out… a cheerleader’s uniform? I’m not surprised, somehow.

“But why!?” Haruki almost looked disappointed. “Come on, it’ll look cute. You can’t tell me you don’t want to look cute.”

“No.”

He pulled his cellphone out of his jersey pocket and started waving it around.

“We can even take photos! Photos of you being cute. So you can show your grandkids how cute you were when you weren’t old and ugly.”

…Is that supposed to convince me of anything? Also, “No.”

“But wait! There’s more! I’ve also got a free—"

“Haruki.” Is all I can say, with my hand covering half my face.

“Yeah, what? You’re interrupting my spiel here.”

“How, exactly, will me being in a cheerleader costume help us to win the game at all!?”

He sighs. “We’re going to overwhelm them with your cuteness while you wear this outfit, of course!”

…What, exactly…?

“Since I figure all female baseball players are dykes anyway, this’ll definitely do the trick!”

I-I can’t even begin to… also, “No.”

“Bah,” Haruki grunts. “Fine, I’ll use Plan B. The B, by the way, stands for—“

I had already gone back to my seat in the dugout at that point.


Haruki soon returned, and dragged Asahina-senpai behind the bleachers. As soon as I heard the screams, I suddenly wished I had worn the cheerleader uniform.


I hate struggling with poor sentence structure and wading through pronouns, so I inevitably end up rewriting entire sections and coming up with original stuff like this.

We have someone who wants to do the rewrites from now on waiting in the wings already, so expect more from him at some point in the future.

I'll still be coming up with general ideas and more original concepts, if anyone's interested, though I'd like to channel my energy into the VN from now on.

Thanks for reading!

No need to thank me, at least; thank you for writing! ^^ Epic. I laughed so hard ... But now you need to find a reason for Kyonko to put the outfit on after all. Maybe a hench(wo)man could suddenly dump a bucket of water on her from up on the bleachers?

[Akkuseru Jeshii]

why cant Haruki do it himself?

[Aebliss]

why cant Haruki do it himself?

He's standing right in front of her, holding the cheerleader outfit. If he runs off to get the bucket, Kyonko's just going to walk back to the dugout before he returns.

[Nanao-kun]

“But wait! There’s more! I’ve also got a free—"



I miss Billy Mays.

Good night, sweet prince...

EDIT: We need a cameo appearance.

[Akkuseru Jeshii]

He's standing right in front of her, holding the cheerleader outfit. If he runs off to get the bucket, Kyonko's just going to walk back to the dugout before he returns.

oh sorry, I figured you were refering to after she initially says no and walks away, I guess your way akes more sence then

[OkamiNoKaze]

Would he be changed into Wilma Mays?

[Kaisos Erranon]

Um, not to burst anyone's bubble, but Danchou and I were going to have otai do the rewrites... >_>

We need a cameo appearance.

HA! That'd be great.

Haruki can be all "my hero!"

Okay, sorry for the delay in commenting, I've been out of this thread for a while. This is getting really interesting~! ^^ I look forward to reading more.

Myrtle.

No need to thank me, at least; thank you for writing! ^^ Epic. I laughed so hard ... But now you need to find a reason for Kyonko to put the outfit on after all. Maybe a hench(wo)man could suddenly dump a bucket of water on her from up on the bleachers?

Instead of swearing to pay for dinner for everyone if she fails, it's how she convinces Haruki to let her pitch: She wears the cheerleading uniform.

[Roger Rambo]

He's standing right in front of her, holding the cheerleader outfit. If he runs off to get the bucket, Kyonko's just going to walk back to the dugout before he returns.
Because as much of a jackass as Haruki is, we can't make him so bad that he's willing to forcibly strip members of the opposite gender.

[Pip]

um, not to burst anyone's bubble, but danchou and i were going to have otai do the rewrites... >_>


yay!!! We have an official rewrite author!!!

[Akkuseru Jeshii]

Um, not to burst anyone's bubble, but Danchou and I were going to have otai do the rewrites... >_>

wish I read that earlier, I just spent the last four hours doing an editted version of Aaron008R's work

[DannyCat]

Kang Seung Jae seems to have either disappeared entirely or just plain lost interest in this project.

Last Activity: 2009-03-09 20:45

I'd guess the former; he hasn't even logged in in four months.

[Roger Rambo]

Poor Mitsuru.

So IS Kyonko going to heroically sacrifice herself, or ideally stand by?

[Kaisos Erranon]

Poor Mitsuru.

So IS Kyonko going to heroically sacrifice herself, or ideally stand by?

It's not like she can just waltz over and stop Haruki from stripping his subordinate.

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

Actually, she can... sort of. She could volunteer to be the subordinate that gets stripped.

Of course, doing so would be completely out of character for her, and would only cause problems down the road for us.

[Akkuseru Jeshii]

she could go back over and complain to Haruki why it's a bad thing for a boy to be dressed in a girls cheerleading outfit, that seems somewhat in character for her

also, here's my edit of Day of Sagittarius originally posted by Aaron008R

so pretty much all I did was some cleaning up, smoothing out sentences, and of coarse fixxed some messed up pronouns

“…”

“I can’t see a thing…”

Only the dark expanse of space registered before my eyes…

Have you ever tried spending time outdoors during a bright day and then entering a very dim lit room? Yes, it’s just as dark as what I’m seeing now. The only thing is; the darkness in here isn’t fading away like that in the room. A galaxy without any stars… It sounds romantic if you look at it a certain way… Unraveling the stars sounds nice… Except I can’t see the stars right now because of more worldly reasons…

“Alright! Let’s bust them up good!”

Sigh… Too worldly for my tastes… But then, since we’re talking about Haruki Suzumiya here, things are far from what I’d call ‘worldly’…

“I don’t get what they need this darkness for.”

I grumbled onto my screen. Everything except for a few dots here and there is complete darkness. It makes me wonder if my screen was the only one with this defect… They call this the, 'Fog of War'...? I don't think real wars even have fog! And isn’t fog supposed to be white?

And then suddenly, a bright dot began moving forward from my screen. I decided to report to my commander…

“Haruki, shouldn’t you slow down? You’re going too fast.”

And he replied…

"Call me Supreme Commander, First Officer!” he thumped his chest confidently in an annoying way, “The SOS Brigade possesses the highest military ranks; after all, we're the greatest ever!"

Then who’s the Supreme Commander and First Officer between us?

“Commander Suzumiya~!” Intelligence Officer Nagato-kun reports that the enemy fleet is moving suspiciously. What will be our response?

Itsuko Koizumi, the annoyingly smiley ‘Please continue!’ girl, reported our findings promptly. Haruki’s response was “Bah, We’ll get them with the element of surprise!”

A bold statement, as to be expected from Haruki, but no one obeyed him. Or rather, we didn’t want to obey him. Because for somebody that doesn’t even play games like these in the first place, it’s obvious to find that facing the enemy head-on was suicide!

Asahina-sempai raised his hand and asked nervously, “Ahh… What was I supposed to do again?”

“Somebody as wimpy as you would just get in our way, Mitsuru. Just get your butt over there and your supply fleet. Since you haven’t yet reached the level of manliness to participate here, Kyon, Yuuki and Koizumi-chan are in charge of the enemy’s front guard. I’ll finish them off with a powerful shot. A one-hit-kill shot that is!”

Somehow, I could hear him laughing maniacally inside his head.

And wait, why are Koizumi and I here in the first place if manliness is needed? We're girls, dammit!

I sighed again and returned my gaze to the screen in front of me. Let’s see, from what I’ve read in the manual... My fleet, the <Kyon Fleet> should be this one, currently following the <Commander Haruki Fleet>. Koizumi’s <Koizumi Fleet> fleet is on our side while Nagato-kun’s <Yuuki Fleet> fleet was in front.

“Awawawa~! W-where am I?!”

I tried hard to keep myself from letting out another sigh. Asahina-sempai, despite being a boy, is apparently more clueless in this than I am! I spared glancing at him, praying that he at least stay behind to avoid being hit.

“Ah!”

Nagato-kun has found some enemy ships! And as seen on the screen, the enemy vessels were shown in my map. I remember thinking that unraveling stars sounded cute, but this isn’t cute at all!

“Alright!” Haruki exclaimed with uninfectious enthusiasm, “We came, we saw. And next-”

“Haruki!” I groaned indignantly at him, “This is exactly what made us lose in all those practice matches! Why not try acting like a commander for once and stay back?!”

"What the hell are you talking about?!"

Haruki's eyebrows twitched in irritation.

"How can I leave all the actions to my underlings? I’ve got my arsenal locked and loaded. And I’m itching to fire on those cocky bastards!"

“Mou!” I urged my fleet forward to catch up with his, and said, "Haruki, just think of this like chess. Since you’re the king, If we lose you, then we all lose. The same goes for them. Do you think their leader is going up front as well? You need strategy to win a game like this, you can’t go around treating it like a royal rumble!”

"Ehe...” Haruki blinked a few times. Then smiled wryly, “you’re right..."

Just when I thought I’d finally scored a victory against him. Not to mention my own surprise at my little tactical scolding just then, he just had to rebound with as much intensity.

“Alright, then!” Haruki arrogantly rubbed his nose with an even more arrogant smirk up his face. He then stared at me like some sort pet and commanded, “I’ll leave it to you guys for now. They come, you fire. Losing is not an option!” He raised his voice even further, “Alright people, move it! The SOS Brigade’s reputation is at stake!”

Koizumi spoke up, "Commander. Intelligence Officer Nagato-kun's <Yuuki Fleet> has engaged the enemy.” She then turned with her usual smiling face to Haruki, “I’d appreciate it as well if you stayed back, Commander Suzumiya. We will do your bidding without fail.”

Oh. I’m so sure YOU would...

Koizumi sounded serious, but how can anybody sound like that with such a cheerful disposition?

"Oh... really?"

Haruki’s arrogant grin even widened further than I imagined possible, no thanks to Koizumi playing submissive... He reclined back in his chair and raised both his legs, laying them on the table next to the computer like some sort of big-shot tycoon or something.

"Since Advising Officer Koizumi-chan says so, I'll take her advice. Everyone! Go out and kill them all! Show those Computer Study Group people the consequences of trying to be TOO clever. Our battle objective is total annihilation! Grind them all into stardust!"

I fumed a little at how Haruki listened more to Koizumi’s sweet-talk rather than on my well-grounded advice. Suddenly feeling like letting out some frustration, I glared back at my screen, ready to fire, whatever these weapons are called. Though some doubt lingered in the back of my mind that this could be a trap of some kind.

Honestly, I feel like we have just about as much chance as the Americans did at Pearl Harbor when the Japanese, during the onset of World War II, bombarded them. We were; seriously unprepared, under-experienced, lacked one fleet (I spared a look at Asahina-sempai), had a hot-blooded idiot of a commander and... and...

I sighed again.

If there is a God out there, please help us…

Haruki sneezed.

I couldn’t hold it this time, I slumped headfirst into my arms on the table, resisting the urge to moan in helplessness. No, not him!

“Kyon! I said attack! Not take a nap!”

“I know!”

That’s right; I can’t give up that easily. Even girls have a sense of pride too. I halfheartedly raised my head and stared intently at my screen. I felt my eyes widen slightly, seeing as Nagato-kun already located most of the enemies, though the commander was nowhere to be seen yet. I looked at him and smiled appreciatively. With that he gave me a blank nod and began typing on his keyboard again. Somehow, I think we might just have a chance with Nagato-kun helping…

What strategy should we use?

"Alright...... here!"

I stared into the LCD monitor of my notebook PC, guessing at where Commander Haruki's intentions might lead us.

But before we get there, I’d like to note just how we got into this fine mess…

It all began a week ago.



One autumn day after school.

The school festival has already ended and our school was back to its peaceful days…

“……”

Well, ‘peaceful’ can be loosely defined when your an unwilling participant of the SOS Brigade… Still, my situation couldn’t be more relaxing.

I felt a little hurt since the others won’t fully talk to me about the details. Koizumi was being smileier than ever, though. Nagato-kun’s blank expression looked heartening.

I found out that I’m now relying quite a lot on Nagato-kun for foretelling of strange things to come. Right now, he was reading as much as ever, which is abut as good a sign as it can get. If he were to act weird or helpless, I’m pretty sure I’d break down in a panic!

Meanwhile, a cute boy crossdressing as a cute maid, continues serving us tea. Frankly, I’m not too sure if I could believe he was from the future. If he’s from the future, shouldn’t he at least act as if he knew some of the stuff that would happen to us more often! He began preparing Japanese like a pro. He actually makes me a bit jealous since he’s a boy and yet he’s so good at it. Asahina-sempai’s so accurate with his measurements that he could make excellent tea with mere tap water!

He held a thermometer in one hand, and opened the kettle lid with his other hand. Sticking the thermometer into the kettle, he studied it intently. I just couldn't see him as someone from the future. It just didn’t fit his personality at all. Though in retrospect, I guess the identities of my other co-members didn’t fit them either. I sighed realizing that I’m the only normal one here. But, if everybody else in the group isn’t normal, does that make me the weird one? Ugh. I’m over-thinking things again…

This clubroom once belonged to the Literature Club, but for some time now it’s been the lair for Suzumiya Haruki and his lackeys. I'm probably pretty special myself, considering how sane I remain in such a distorted dimension. Everybody was backed up by something special, and Haruki, our self-proclaimed leader, was even more enigmatic as he was uncontrollably willful. We’re full of Boke’s while I’m the sole Tsukkomi. Guu~! This is so frustrating!

Four complete weirdoes against a single objective girl – the ratio’s way off! I’m supposed to be the damsel in distress, forced into captivity here by Haruki, not the damsel in distress forced to fend for herself! If only someone could share my pain… This burden is a little too much for a simple girl like me to handle. Oh, woe is me. Forced to carry the weight of the world on my willowy shoulders! I wish I could get somebody to help me, but Kunikida and Taniguchi don’t deserve to be subjected into this. For all my vocabulary and knowledge about this stuff that never seems to make it’s way into our school, I can hardly rein Haruki myself, how can they? Tsuruya-san would also make a good candidate, but he’s buddies with Haruki! Sigh…

"Hmm."

I crossed my arms and legs, mumbling silently while in deep thought… though it wasn’t me pondering on what move to make next in my Go game with Koizumi. She was too easy to defeat, in any board game for that matter. So easy that sometimes I think she’s doing it solely to appease me with wins. Well, sorry. I may be simple, but I’m definitely not as shallow! Anyway, the thing that was troubling me the most was whether this world’s normal or not. Because according to my theory, in a mad world, only the insane can live their lives normally, even the most mentally sane individuals would be driven mad eventually. I think I should commend myself for being able to co-exist peacefully as a normal high school student in this whirlpool that IS the SOS Brigade, where normal rules don't apply. I ought to be praised on this alone.

"Allow me to give you some words of praise, Kyon~chan."

Koizumi managed to elegantly place her piece down on the Go board and gracefully take one of my white pieces away. She might have made a good move, but it’s already too late, she been on the losing side since three moves ago.

"Thanks, but maybe not." I replied, placing my hands into the container of Go pieces. Koizumi only smiled more sickeningly sweet than usual while praising me as I mixed the pieces… though instead of getting it’s desired effect, I’m feeling more aggravated. I stopped mixing the Go pieces for a moment and crossed my arms on the table, resting my chin on them. "You’re praise isn’t really giving me a feeling of gratification, Koizumi-san. Instead, I’m getting more apprehensive on what you could be plotting. Let me tell you this right now, I refuse to be used in one of your crazy stunts.”

She only copied my posture, her eyes staring dreamily into mines, making me feel extremely uncomfortable, averted my eyes, "Don’t be so paranoid, Kyon-chan. I’m more of a supporting character here. You and Suzumiya-san are the ones leading the dance.” She raised a finger and traced it in the air in a wavy pattern. “I’m just a butterfly drawn in by the flowers in the spring…”

Brushing away the highly unpleasant thought of me dancing with Haruki, I refocused my look on her, making it a slight glare this time. Koizumi Itsuko, an admittedly very attractive young girl seemingly having no flaws. But of course, Haruki didn’t pick her for her appearance or personality. It’s simply because she was transfer student; something that seems to interest Haruki more than gender-attributes. I don’t know who’s intention it was that the two of them meet in such a coincidental manner and she be brought in the Brigade. Shouldn’t she be avoiding Haruki if she was truly an esper he’d go gaga over?

"That was in the past."

Koizumi picked up a Go piece and played with it deftly on her hand. “In truth, I was told to do nothing more than to observe Suzumiya-san. You could imagine my shock when he barged into my homeroom and brought me here.” she put the piece down and picked another one, elegantly holding it in front of her eyes as if to observe the design.

You? Afraid? I’d imagine the entire class to be the ones shocked by him instead.

She giggled annoyingly, “But that’s the truth. And in the end, I couldn’t help but smile when I found about our Brigade’s objectives.” she nostalgically continued, "But things are different now. I may have been a mysterious transfer student back then, but I'd have lost that attribute by now. I'm sure Suzumiya-san thinks so as well."

"Does it matter? You’re still one of the defining people in the ‘Mysterious’ category to me."

Koizumi looked around the room like a cat that loves narrow spaces: she first fixed her gaze on Nagato-kun, who was busy reading, then on Asahina, who was paying close attention to the kettle. Then her gaze returned to its original place upon myself.

If Haruki hadn’t had cleaning duty that day, Koizumi and I wouldn't have been chatting away in such a relaxed manner. To be honest, I never thought Haruki would actually follow the cleaners schedule, given how obstinate he is.

In the clubroom with our commander absent, Koizumi smiled gently like an experienced vet about to cure a wounded bird and said. "Right now, I, Nagato-san, Asahina-san, and you have now become the wonderful members of the SOS Brigade. Nothing more, nothing less. I'm sure Suzumiya-san must be thinking the same way as well."

We played another game, with me using white. "Might I ask your definition of 'nothing more, nothing less'? Is there some meaning to that?"

"Of course there's a meaning. Paranormal existences like aliens and dimensional travelers are considered more than just members, while everyone else is less significant than us members."

Then Taniguchi, Kunikida, Tsuruya-san and my brother are considered less significant than members? That sounds really unfair.

"It's simple, really. If their existence meant a lot to Suzumiya-san, then they would already be members by now and would be here in this room as we speak… But the fact that they're not means that they aren't important enough in the eyes of Suzumiya-san.

"They only mean as much to her as the ordinary passerby. After talking so much, we still can't avoid using the consequential theory."

"Then what about dimensional travelers? Have they not arrived yet?"

"Judging from the results, they probably don't exist. If they did, then they would be summoned to this room by chance or fate."

"They better not come. I don't want to be sucked into an alternate dimension."

As I placed my white piece down and devour Koizumi's pieces, a tea cup was being placed by the Go board with the victor decided.

"Sorry to keep you waiting. Please enjoy your tea."

Smiling like a gentle coach; who had managed to lead his rag-tag school baseball team to the regional championship, Asahina stood by the table and said,

"I bought a new brand of tea leaves called 'Karigane.' It's easy to brew, but it's really expensive."

Asahina-sempai! Shouldn’t you be asking Haruki for reimbursement on your expenses? You don’t have to shoulder the expenses on your own; nor do you need to pick top-class tea for our sakes. What matters is the thought, and with your skill, any kind of tea tastes good; whether it be made with tap water or not.

"Here, then please try out the tea."

Asahina cosplayed as a maid for so long, he was starting to get good at it. Ugh, if Haruki’s trying to make him manlier, this is definitely NOT how he should go about it. He placed another cup by Koizumi's side, then gracefully carried the tray over and placed a cup by Nagato's side. Then again, a part of me isn’t really complaining on how Asahina-sempai is dressed right now.

"......"

As per usual, Nagato-kun only thanked Asahina-sempai with death-like silence, though it didn’t seem to perturb our crossdressing senior in the least. Come to think of it, Nagato-kun is always like this to. He’s like a robot… But maybe that’s fine. I can’t imagine Nagato-san as anything else now. If he were, I’d probably pass out from the shock. And the less he is like Haruki, the better. He’s the closest thing I have to sanity here in the SOS clubroom, and for that I’m grateful.

It's best for silent people to remain silent. For my sanity…

I can’t stress enough what moments of peace like these have really meant to me in the past several days of my life. Ahh~, it’s so relaxing, it’s like I could forget I ever became involved in all that madness in the past…

*knock knock*

I winced involuntarily. As it seems, evil has a way of reminding you that it always exist. But why did it have to be now?! Taking deep calming breaths for whatever was to come. Why? Because this obviously isn’t Haruki. That person NEVER knocks. If he did, I’d probably be in laughing hysterically! No, this was obviously another person. I don’t really know who, but I’m sure there must be some profound reason why anybody sane would visit this room.

"Ah, Coming."

Asahina-sempai rushed with little steps in his slippers to answer the door. Ugh, now he’s even acting more and more like a girl. And a maid at that! I actually had half a mind to hide him in a closet to avoid embarrassing him, but it looks like I’m too late.

"Huh?"

Asahina opened the door and blinked his eyes as if seeing a surprise visitor.

"W-welcome. Would you like to come in?"

Asahina-sempai walked backwards two steps.

“……”

A silence hung thickly around the room, peering curiously; I looked at our ‘visitors’.

“Gah!”

It was that perverted yaoi fangirl Computer Club President!

I immediately clamped my hands over my mouth to avoid exclaiming too loudly. Why the heck are THEY here? And hey, stop staring dreamily at Asahina-sempai like that!

"A-ah, n-no thanks, I only need to say something standing here."

Her response sounded a bit anxious. She stuck her head through the open door and looked around the room.

"Oh, your commander isn't here......"

Since no one else said anything, I ended up having to handle negotiations. Asahina-sempai stood there looking confused; Koizumi only sat there and smiled at the president, while Nagato-kun simply continued reading his book.

"How can we help you?"

Since she was a senior, it was only natural to be polite to her. I walked out and stood in front of Asahina-sempai. Hmm? Behind the Computer Club president, who hadn't even stepped through the doorway, stood a bunch of her vegetative female cronies. I tensed up even more as Asahina-sempai hid behind me. Oh great, what’s this about? Revenge? I’m pretty sure I can’t handle them alone!

When the president noticed it was me coming out, she breathed a sigh of relief and smiled lightly, brushing her hair to the side. She then straightened her back and said,

"Here."

“Huh?”

It was a CD case. Wait; is this one of those videos you‘ve all been slobbering over in secret?! I gave her an apprehensive look.

The president’s eyebrow twitched, “D-don’t get the wrong idea!” she said vehemently, blushing a bit, “It’s just a new game software that we, the Computer Club, have developed. We had it put up for distribution during the school festival, Don’t you remember?”

School festival? I’m sorry, but I happened to be busy then. And even if I wasn’t, I doubt I’d remember a computer game being put up since I don’t play them. My little brother should be the one to talk to if you plan on giving this to someone.

"I see......"

Her expression was sullen, “I guess it makes sense, our location wasn’t exactly ideal…”

Okay. I have no idea what this is about. But I suggest you leave now before Haruki comes, or we’ll all be have big headaches.

“Wha-I understand!” she stood up straight and brought her fist to her side, “But we do have a reason for being here.” The then lifeless minions behind her tensed up as well. Then the president raised her right hand and pointed at us, making me take an involuntary step back. "We want a showdown with you guys!"

“Eh?”

Why would we want to have a match with the Computer Club with this game? If you're short on players, then my best advice is to go try your luck with other clubs.

"This isn't a game!"

Looks like the president wants to struggle onward.

"This is a showdown! With stakes involved!"

“Oh, I’m sure Koizumi Itsuko-san would play with you if you asked her.”

"No! We want to have a showdown with the entire SOS Brigade!"

I cringed. Please stop saying showdown with such a loud voice. If Haruki hears this-

“K-KYAAAH!”

“What the-!”

A small white thing flashed between us, landing in front of the president’s shoes. She dropped backwards to her minions, becoming a messy tangle of limbs.

“P-president!”

“Are you alright?!”

H-hey, please hurry up and stand up, all of you. Those poses are highly undignified, and expose parts under your skirts….

I looked down at what caused her to fall over, a card? How did it stick to the grou- Oh. This is one of those trick cards you can find in magic stores.

“Haha! Who dares disturb the peace of my Brigade?!” boomed an extremely arrogant male voice.

I planted my palm on my face before looking at who spoke.

Suzumiya Haruki, with an expression that I assume should look cool for him, sauntered over to our location, shuffling several cards. Hey, aren’t those banned at our school?!

“Hah!” Haruki ran forward and jumped, doing an honestly well-executed somersault before landing with a pose in front of me, facing towards the Computer Club girls.

“Who are you and what’s your business with us?!” He demanded as he stood up and pointed at the girls, looking pleased with his entrance “So, are you perhaps an Evil Syndicate that has sworn to become the SOS Brigade’s enemy? HA! Let me tell you now that it’s useless. Your villainous plans shall be purged by the light of our justice! If you’re just going to bring small fry, then you might as well forget it! Where’s you’re leader?! Let’s take this battle to the climax right here and now!” he said while gesturing flamboyantly like those costumed superheroes you see on TV.

The president and her members seem too busy untangling themselves and pushing down their skirts to have listened properly, so I think I was the only one who heard Haruki’s speech.

"Haruki! Do you have any idea how rude that was?! "

Ever since I entered high school, I've forgotten how many times I’ve tried to hold Haruki back.

"You should at least hear her out before announcing your challenge for mortal combat. Thanks to you, I don't even know why she came here! All I know is that she wants to have a showdown with us on some computer game they made......"

“Ssshhoooww-DOWN?!” Haruki drawled loudly as he turned to face me.

Oh great, wrong word.

He clamped a hand on my shoulder and pumped up his other hand in a power-fist gesture, "Kyon! When someone declares a showdown, then it's decided. This is a declaration of war. Anything the loser says past that is just an excuse! Who cares about what they say even before we beat them!"

Okay, okay! I give up! Just get your hand of my shoulder, your squeezing me too hard!

Like a hunter going to check on his prey, Haruki walked towards the moaning and trembling girls of the Computer Club. He seemed to have only noticed who they are NOW, since he looked rather surprised as he exclaimed, “What the-?! It’s just the girls from next door! What business do you have with us?” he smirked, “Are you going to lend us another computer?”

That's why I told you that she needs a chance to explain herself… you were the one who threw in a sneak attack before launching yourself into a gratuitous monologue!

"That's because," Haruki scratched the back of his head, "I thought it was the Student Council coming to drive us from our club room. It's about time they did. Really, why do people come to us looking for trouble all the time?"

Even if it was the Student Council, I doubt you’d have acted differently.

As I was trying hard to talk Haruki out of it......

"Come to think of it, we still haven't held that other activity......"

Koizumi suddenly appeared outside in the corridor and reminded Haruki about something in a deep thought way. Must you really be such a busybody?

"Ugh...... SOS Brigade...... you really are shameless......"

Don’t bunch me in with Haruki, please. I happen to know etiquette. And I’m quite sure I know it better than you do.

After moaning even more, the president finally managed to stand up, aided by her members carrying her,

"A-anyway, let's have a showdown. I know we don't get along well, so I've prepared a written statement. Once you read it, you'll know what the showdown is about."

One of the members, a bespectacled girl, took out a stack of photocopied paper and CD boxes, and walked towards us in fear, as if trying to feed the wild lions with raw meat.

"Thanks."

Koizumi smiled sweetly and received the papers and CDs.

"We've received the game software, but is there an instruction manual?"

Another member carried a second stack of papers and handed it to Koizumi, then quietly said, "President, we've completed our task. Let’s return to our club room."

"Yeah, let's go back."

She nodded weakly, looking slightly relieved.

"Then, please excuse us......"

After explaining some of the events, the president prepared to make her escape.

“Just wait a damned second.” Haruki quickly walked around and blacked their path.

“W-what are you doing?!”

"Explain everything properly before you leave! Don't think you can shut me up with a stupid written statement! Now say it in a language that even our idiot Mitsuru here can understand!"

“E-EH?!” exclaimed Asahina-sempai, who was just being silent up until now.

Wha-?! If anybody’s an idiot here, it’s you!!?

As a result, the poor Computer Club president got dragged back into the Literature Clubroom. Before the other Computer Club members could rescue her, the door was slammed shut.

[Kaisos Erranon]

she could go back over and complain to Haruki why it's a bad thing for a boy to be dressed in a girls cheerleading outfit, that seems somewhat in character for her.

Mitsuuru isn't going to be in the female cheerleader's outfit.

Haruki dresses himself and Mitsuuru up in gakurans (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Osu!_Tatakae!_Ouendan) in order to cheer the team on.

They look so stupid that the Pirates end up getting distracted ANYWAY.

That was my idea, in any case.

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

Aw... But Mitsuuru being scarred for life by being forced to dress like a girl in front of a large group of people is hilarious. :heh:

[Akkuseru Jeshii]

definatly, there's no doubt your idea is good, I just like the 'life-scarring thing' a tiny bit more

[Kaisos Erranon]

Aw... But Mitsuuru being scarred for life by being forced to dress like a girl in front of a large group of people is hilarious. :heh:

He's supposed to be becoming MORE manly, not less. :heh:

Of course, that's the joke, but...

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

REAL MEN WEAR DRESSES!


Sorry :heh:

[Kaisos Erranon]

REAL MEN WEAR DRESSES!


Sorry :heh:

You'll never see Haruki in a dress. >_>

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

Well yeah. He doesn't need to prove his manliness. Mitsuuru does.

[Joe4evr]

REAL MEN WEAR DRESSES!I believe the trope was Real Men Wear Pink.

You still wouldn't see Haruki in pink, but still...:heh:

[Ithekro]

How was the scene where normally Haruhi was changing Mikuru into the maid outfit handled...the one where she has Kyon take pictures? Itsuki walks in on it and at least in the anime Kyon is trying to seperate Haruhi from her happiness that is feeling up Mikuru (Haruhi looks so happy).

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

Actually, I could totally see Haruki getting away with wearing pink. But that trope applies to anything that would normally be associated with females, so it's a moot point.

[Akkuseru Jeshii]

definetly, this guy at my high school: Ross Bennet, he's what I hear girls call really manly and he wears pink shirts alot

[Nanao-kun]

definetly, this guy at my high school: Ross Bennet, he's what I hear girls call really manly and he wears pink shirts alot

Pink huh, while I favor white and light blue colors, I suppose pink is always an interesting choice. Although I don't recommend talking about others online. It's best to keep your real life separate from your online life after all. At least, that's how I feel.

On an unrelated note, I just began playing Umineko.

As for the people who don't mind reading this last sentence, I added a simple frame for my avatar.

[Roger Rambo]

definetly, this guy at my high school: Ross Bennet, he's what I hear girls call really manly and he wears pink shirts alot
Macho guys can get away with cross dressing. At my high school, there was this football player who once showed up to school in a dress. Nobody said a word about it to him.

...probably because one time in weight training when he couldn't make a rep, he got really angry and punched the wall.

[vivify93]

I...um...wow.

I don't know any guy who ever wore a dress. Thank God.

[DannyCat]

Apparently fashion designers tried it back (http://lileks.com/institute/dorcus/football.html) in the 60s (http://lileks.com/institute/dorcus/dress.html).

The stories accompanying each photo are written comedically (it's Lileks), but in all likelihood, the photos themselves are genuine, though obscure in origin.

[Jintor]

Carton of Eggs

"…"

"It’s early morning. It’s rare that I ever wake up this early on my own."

"But for the past few nights, I’ve been having strange dreams about... well, a pool of water in the sky. That ripples, as though water was falling into it from somewhere."

"Or was the pool of water the sky itself?"

"I know it doesn't really make any sense, but that's dreams for you."

"It’s said that most of the dreams people have they never remember in the morning. I suppose that’s why I-"

"Forget everything you’ve ever known"

"-can never remember the details."

"Still, I think there was something important…"

"As I try to recall, which gives me a headache, my alarm clock goes off with a loud ring, and, right on schedule, my sister barges into my room with a-"


Sister: "Kyon-kun~, it’s time to get up!"

Kyon: "Gyaaaa!"


"I throw off the covers suddenly, while yelling, to try and surprise her."


Sister: "Wow, Kyon-kun’s up already!"


"She seems more shocked than surprised. Damn it." [Editor's Notes: ???]


[Scene: Dining Room]

"Despite my rude awakenings and energetic sister, breakfast at my house is usually a calm affair. I can only imagine the horror if I lived with someone like Haruhi."

"…Strange. That brings to mind something that I think I should have forgotten. A girl with brown hair, who—"

"I was so deep in thought that I didn’t notice my mother trying to get my attention. Apologizing, I half-listen as she tells me a strange story about a carton of eggs."

"According to her, yesterday afternoon, she put a carton of eggs back into the fridge after using all but one of them. This morning, when she opened up the fridge again, the carton was completely full."

"Odd, but not something I really think I should be concerned about. Maybe my mother bought a new carton of eggs and forgot that she did so? I ask her this."

"My mother is adamant that the full carton appeared out of nowhere. If a certain someone was around, I’m sure she’d already be in my fridge looking for ‘mysterious events’. Maybe I should tell her about—no, god no, I don’t want that terror rooting through my house."

"Anyway, I’m sure my mother just misremembered. Nothing amazing here. Also, it’s just about time for me to go to school. Thanks for the food, mother."

"As I get on my bike and head towards North High, living my carefree days, I had no idea that the innocent carton of eggs would soon be at the center of a world-ending catastrophe."

"…No, no, that kind of development isn’t going to happen. Sometimes, like Freud would say, a carton of eggs is just a carton of eggs."

"...although I don't think that's quite the right context."


Might work on this more later. The mum 'dialogue' is still a little odd.

[Akkuseru Jeshii]

Although I don't recommend talking about others online. It's best to keep your real life separate from your online life after all. At least, that's how I feel.

thanks for the advise, I'll be sure to refain from mentioning names in the future (besides my own of coarse :D)

[besieger]

BTW, do kilts count? :D

[Lord Vildrek]

Sometimes it's kind of fun to do girly things... don't judge me XD

[Akkuseru Jeshii]

if girls can do guy things, then guys should be allowed to do girl things too

[vivify93]

lolno.

double standard.

I'd get the TVTropes article, but I'm lazy as hell. I'll wait for Kaisos or Kogetsu.

[CanadaAotS]

Alright, so I've decided to start up an "Artwork Checklist". Essentially, a list of CG, sprites, and references to scene effects as they appear in each scene. Usually with a short description of what I imagine it to be like (which gives everyone a good chance to discuss the artistic direction of the VN. Obviously what I imagine a scene to be like isn't the same as everyone else).

If there's anything I'm missing, or doing wrong, please let me know.


Prologue

Event CG: Stars in the Water
The whole screen appears to be rippling water reflecting the night sky.

Event CG: Gray Classroom
An empty gray classroom. The windows are closed, and you can't see outside through them, by reflecting the room they seem nearly opaque. The view is from the front of the class looking back. Haruhi is standing at her desk, arms crossed, with a dour expression on her face.

Event CG: Class of Drones
Same scene, except now the class is filled with faceless "dummy" students, other then Haruhi and Kyon in the back. The classroom looks livelier in this CG then the previous. The lighting (seems) better.

Event CG: Yuki First Infodump
The scene from Melancholy where Yuki tells Kyon about the IDE.

Event CG: Mikuru First Infodump
The scene from Melancholy where Mikuru tells Kyon about time travellers.

Event CG: Itsuki First Infodump
The scene from Melancholy where Itsuki tells Kyon about espers.

Event CG: Placating God
The scene from Melancholy where Kyon kisses Haruhi in closed space. Kyon, Haruhi in foreground (not yet kissing), with the avatars fairly close in the background.

Background: Baseball Field
Just a baseball field background. I don't know if we'll need to use this more then once, but oh well. No sprites.

Event CG(?): CRACK
Some sort of crack happens here? Perhaps an animation of the scene previous actually cracking, or a cut to a black screen that smashes. Depends on what can be done with renpy I suppose.

Event CG: GREEN
Green field, darker green forest, teal sky, emerald sun. Everything is green. Tsuruya (?) is turning towards the viewer, with a bright smile. I sort of imagine her in a summer dress for this CG.

Event CG(?): Crack
Same as above

Event CG: Chess Piece
Kyon standing on a chessboard, as the “king”, looking fearfully up at a giant Hand of God reaching down for him. The background should be a grey haze, with only the hand, chessboard and pieces illuminated.

Event CG: Sand Cricket
The Sand Cricket from Melancholy, rearing it's ugly head.

Event CG: Dead Man
I assume this is the scene from Remote Island Syndrome where they first discover the body.

Event CG: EE – The Park
The scene from Endless Eights where Mikuru, Kyon, Itsuki and Nagato have gathered together because they've realized they're stuck in a time loop. Well, ¾ recognized it – Nagato already knew.

Event CG: EE – Stargazing
The scene from Endless Eights with Itsuki and Kyon discussing what to do about the time loop as Mikuru and Haruhi sleep, up on Nagato's apartment building roof.

From here on it'll quickly shuffle between the above cg in this order:
Gray Classroom
Class of Drones
Yuki Infodump
Mikuru Infodump
Itsuki Infodump
(*Hey, we skipped Placating God or the Baseball Field?)
Baseball Field
CRACK
GREEN
CRACK
Chess Piece
Giant Cricket
Dead Man
EE – The Park
EE – Stargazing
(Ripple transition)
This will loop 5 times, although for the last loop we might want to do something different since it's going very quickly. Perhaps a video scene instead of a normal background, with the 14 transitions looping. The prologues got to pull them in, so all the neat eye-catchy stuff is good to use here.


God damn, this is art heavy. I count about 15 Event CG's here. The ripple at the beginning, the 13 that loop, and the Kyon-Haruhi scene at the end of Melancholy arc.

Kind of wondering why Kaisos discluded that in the loop?

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

I'd get the TVTropes article, but I'm lazy as hell. I'll wait for Kaisos or Kogetsu.

You'll be waiting a long time, as Kai tries to avoid TV Tropes and I've given that site more than enough hits. :heh:

Kind of wondering why Kaisos discluded that in the loop?

Probably either forgot or added that into the list later and never bothered to fix the loops.

[CanadaAotS]

... or maybe there's a super secret reason for not having it in there, that's really deep and plot related!

Could happen.

[scify]

BTW, do kilts count? :D
If they do, then I know a fairly manly guy who wanders around my college in a kilt. Pretty awesome guy, actually.

@DannyCat: Damnit... I was just about to look into making a Mordecai avatar. You're awesome for reading Lackadaisy, though.

And reading TVTropes (http://xkcd.com/609/) is almost as bad as reading Wikipedia scientific articles: there's just always one more link in a given set of tropes...

[besieger]

Actually if they do, then I would personally count. I've wore one around the Summer Camp borrowed from one of the pipers before.

[CanadaAotS]

Alright, so I deleted my last post and replaced it with the entire "September the First, Day 0, Universe 1". The farther I got into this, the more I realized I'm art "directing" rather then making a checklist :P

I don't mean to overstep my bounds danchou, honest! Anyways, comments appreciated.


September the First, Day 0, Universe 1: Morning- The End of Eight
Background: Kyon's Room
Self explanatory. Enough screens from the anime to know what it looks like.
Sprite: Kyon no Imouto
Imouto's sprite should appear right with the background.
Background: Kyon's Kitchen
Since there are no screens from the anime, this can be pretty much any old kitchen.
End of Morning- The End of Eight

September the First, Day Zero, Universe 1: Interlude- Dark People in a Dark Room
Event CG: Dark People in a Dark Room
Title speaks for itself. A CRT television illuminating a couple of indistinguisable shadows, vaguely in the shape of humans. Maybe with the slightest hints of who they really are shown in their shape... should definitely be near-impossible to tell though.
End of Interlude- Dark People in a Dark Room

September the First, Day Zero, Universe 1: Classroom- Ordinary Day
Black screen until the “Back in the classroom for a short meeting...” line. Alternatively, you could have an “Outside the School” background till Kyon gets to this line.
Background: Kyon's Class
Sprites: Taniguchi (male), Kunikida (male)
“Yo, Kyon!” Taniguchi appears. “...Kyon, who are you talking to?” Kunikida appears.
“Unfortunately for my sanity,...” is a cue for an Event CG
Event CG: “Default” Haruhi
Haruhi with her arms crossed sitting in her seat at the back of the class, near the window. Does not look happy (though, does she ever look happy when she doesn't have someone to harass? Heh). I think shown from the POV of Kyon looking back from his seat would be good. Otherwise from the POV of someone looking towards Haruhi from the aisle, with Kyon's desk empty.
When Kyon first speaks after the brief introduction of Haruhi (“'Morning”), it should be a cue to go back to the previous background.
Background: Kyon's Class
Sprites: Haruhi
Snark Bait
Same as previous. Will definitely require a scowling-Haruhi sprite.
Theory of Dere
Same as previous. Will definitely require a flustered/blushing Haruhi sprite.
(HHHNNNNNNNNNGGGG)
End of Classroom- Ordinary Day

September the First, Day Zero, Universe 1: Brigade HQ- Poker in a Clubroom
Perhaps a nice outside cut of the old school building would be in order here, as Kyon explains the details of the SOS brigade before he enters the clubroom.
Background: Outside the Old School Building
Sprites: Haruhi. Yuki. Mikuru. Itsuki. Kyon.
When Kyon says “The Brigade is composed of five members” and then starts listing them off, each member should have their sprite appear on the screen as Kyon introduces them. Whichever sprite-expression would be their “default” should be used. This would probably be one of the rare cases where the narrator's sprite is on screen.
On the line “Anyway. I'm in the clubroom now, and school's out” the background should cut to the clubroom.
Background: Clubroom
Sprites: Itsuki
Itsuki's sprite should appear on his first line (“Well, she is a genius...”)
Unrelated but, Royal Flush? Haha, oh wow.
End of Brigade HQ- Poker in a Clubroom

September the First, Day Zero, Universe 1: Brigade HQ- Decision Point
Continuation of “Poker in a Clubroom”
Background: Clubroom
Sprites: Itsuki
End of Brigade HQ- Decision Point

September the First, Day Zero, Universe 1: Library- You Okay?
Continuation of previous scene
Background: Clubroom
Sprites: Itsuki
“The echoing sounds of Koizumi's footsteps” -> Itsuki's sprite disappears.
Right after that line, the scene cuts to the Library.
Background: School Library
Sprites: Yuki
On Kyon's line “Ah, there you are, Nagato!” Yuki's sprite appears.
On the line “As I walk towards my home,” it cuts away from the library scene.
Background: On the Way Home
Random background used when Kyon's walking back to his house. Could probably pull something from the anime to use as reference. It should be late afternoon to early evening at this point.
Now, at the *KSSSSSSSSSSSHH* points I think either a special CG or a static-y scene-out transition should be used. Depends on if the artist wants to do it or the programmers want to do it I guess, haha.
End of Library- You Okay?

September the First, Day Zero, Universe 1: My Room: Existentialism- Another World
Continuation of “Poker in a Clubroom”
Background: Clubroom
Sprites: Itsuki
Kyon leaves, cut to the background of his room.
Background: Kyon's Room
Either still around late afternoon/early evening or already night time at this point.
*KSSSSSSHHH* CG/Transition/Whatever
End of Existentialism- Another World

September the First, Day Zero, Universe 1: Way Home- Dr. Itsuki's Prescription
Continuation of “Poker in a Clubroom”
Background: Clubroom
Sprites: Itsuki
“I head off down the stairs, Koizumi trailing behind”
Background: Outside the Old School Building
Scene cuts to Kyon walking home with Koizumi
Background: On the Way Home
Same description as the part of the scene “Library- You Okay?” where Kyon walks home.
Sprite: Itsuki
Appears with the scene.
“And with that mysterious line, Koizumi fell silent” is the cue for Itsuki's sprite to disappear.
*KSSSSSSHHH* CG/Transition/Whatever
End of Way Home- Dr. Itsuki's Prescription

September the First, Day Zero, Universe 1: Corridor- So Confused
Continuation of “Poker in a Clubroom”
Background: Clubroom
Sprites: Itsuki
Scene cut to Corridor
Background: Corridor
This can probably be reused for any of the classroom corridors.
I Give Up [I] (It was class 2-6)
Background: Asahina's Classroom
Generic classroom is generic, etc.
No need to make a whole new background for each class. The only major difference is Mikuru isn't in this one, heh.
*KSSSSSSHHH* CG/Transition/Whatever
Glowing Smile (It was class 2-3)
Background: Asahina's Classroom
Generic Classroom.
Sprites: Mikuru
Cue appearance at “And my faith is rewarded as I slide open the door of Class 2-3, for there, cleaning the blackboard, is the vision of loveliness herself!”
Glowing Smile [Extended] (Asahina-san, who was supposed to help?)
Continuation of Glowing Smile.
Background: Asahina's Classroom
Sprites: Mikuru
Scene cut to walking home
Background: On the Way Home
Sprites: Mikuru
Mikuru appears. “Mikuru: Bye Bye, Kyon-kun! See you tomorrow!”
Mikuru disappears.
*KSSSSSSHHH* CG/Transition/Whatever
Else (No matter, I'm here to help)
Exact same as Glowing Smile [Extended]. Only difference is this scene has no dialogue before the cut-over to the walk home.
I Give Up [II] (It was class 2-9)
Exact same as “I Give Up [I]”
End of Corridor- So Confused

September the First, Day Zero, Universe 1: Restaurant- This Isn't a Date!
Continuation of “Poker in a Clubroom”
Background: Clubroom
Sprites: Itsuki
Scene cut to Outside Kitaguchi Station
Background: Outside Kitaguchi Station
Several in-show scenes feature this.
Scene cut to inside the restaurant
Background: Inside the Restaurant
Several in-show scenes feature this.
Sprites: Haruhi
Appears at the start of the scene
Divine Wrath (Ever considered a therapist?)
Continuation of “This isn't a Date!”
Background: Inside the Restaurant
Sprites: Haruhi
Outside Kitaguchi background appears at the line “I must endure”
Background: Outside Kitaguchi Station
*KSSSSSSHHH* CG/Transition/Whatever
Divine Blessing (Fine, I'll try some)
Continuation of “This isn't a Date!”
Background: Inside the Restaurant
Sprites: Haruhi
Outside Kitaguchi background appears at the line “And so...”
Background: Outside Kitaguchi Station
*KSSSSSSHHH* CG/Transition/Whatever
End of Restaurant- This Isn't a Date!


Looking over all of Day 0, Universe 1 we'll need:

Backgrounds:
Kyon's Room (Day)
Kyon's Kitchen
Outside the School (Maybe)
Kyon's Classroom
Outside the Old School Building
Clubroom
School Library
On the Way Home (Late Afternoon)
Kyon's Room (Late Afternoon OR Night)
Corridor
Asahina's Classroom
Outside Kitaguchi Station
Inside the Restaurant

Sprites:
Kyon no Imouto
Taniguchi (Male)
Kunikida (Male)
Haruhi
Yuki
Mikuru
Itsuki
Kyon

Event CG:
Dark People in a Dark Room
Haruhi in Class (Looking pissed)

This list is ordered the same way Kaisos and Jintor have written scenes.
One last thing needed is the KSSSSSSHHH CG/Transition/Effect or whatever you guys plan to do for that.

[Kaisos Erranon]

Kind of wondering why Kaisos discluded that in the loop?

Wasn't needed, the kiss scene drives home the point.

Also you're a genius. And I really wonder how you'll try to do the Greentext, heh.

[CanadaAotS]

Wasn't needed, the kiss scene drives home the point.

Also you're a genius. And I really wonder how you'll try to do the Greentext, heh.

Why thank you! Yeah, I've read enough of Universe 1, along with the Shoutacon scene in Universe A to know EXACTLY who the green text is...

Should be fun.

[Kaisos Erranon]

No, not that, I mean how you're suggesting we put that onscreen.

[DJ_RockmanX]

Binjovi made this some time back.

http://img188.imageshack.us/img188/9382/greentext.png (http://img188.imageshack.us/i/greentext.png/)

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

... Could that even be done?

[Kaisos Erranon]

Renpy can do it, pretty sure.

[otai]

*snip

Glad to see you again, and moving the productivity on the VN over 9000.

--------------------
Alright, gang. About the main novel rewrites. It's a long hard job, especially if it is going to be done properly. It has been on indefinite hold for a long time, since Kaisos has all but relinquished the main writing duties for the rewrites in favor of the VN. And frankly, we can't expect any single person to do both these projects and remain in school/employed/sane. So it is now open for the rest of us to complete the rewrite project.

At the moment, I'm finishing up Boredom; since someone has to bite the baseball. If I remember correctly, dkellis volunteered for Bamboo Leaf Rhapsody and Endless Eight, the next chapter chronologically. After that...

Feel free to suggest a system that spreads the pain. For one, we could have a wiki like system with Kaisos as the style editor who directs assisting writers to make edits; while other editors check the grammar & spelling.

[Jintor]

Actually, it would be interesting if the Greentext was just overlaid over the previous narration.

Dunno if it's possible...

[Heatth]

Actually, it would be interesting if the Greentext was just overlaid over the previous narration.

Dunno if it's possible...

It is. But not every Greentext overlais a narration right?

Everything on the binjovi image is also possible, as Kaisos said.

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

There's actually one instance where it's kinda required to replace the dialogue and narration, seeing as it actually interrupts the scene, rather than making comments about it.

[Heatth]

There's actually one instance where it's kinda required to replace the dialogue and narration, seeing as it actually interrupts the scene, rather than making comments about it.

The great breakdown on Mitsuuru scene right? I did it as a static looping animation begining just when Mitsuuru "ends" his speak. With no transition. Also, I did the"KSSSSSSHHH" in the same way (but during 0.4 seconds).

Anyway, I think that Jintor was talking about when the greentext overlay some dialogues. For exemple, female Taniguchi and famale Kunikida didn't talk on Day0. Even tough the male conterpart did. This is because the greentext ovelay their dialogues.

*e*
Oh, yeah, speaking of the image itself. I liked the greentext, tough Jintor's idea isn't bad. However, However, while it works for now, this dialogue box don't fit well with the "dark" mood that Kaisos is wanting for latter Days. I idea would change the layout depending on the Route (it may be difficult, tough).

[Kaisos Erranon]

Just a random question: Is anyone here good at web design?

Or do I have to relearn it? :heh:

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

I've made a few craptastic web pages in the past, if that counts for anything. :heh:

*e* Damn it, am I volunteering myself again? :heh:

[Ithekro]

I'm nine years out of practise on web design.

[DJ_RockmanX]

Don't expect anything from me on this one.

[Kaisos Erranon]

Dammit guys.

Sigh... if anyone can suggest a good (free) webhost I guess I can relearn stuff... but I'm not that talented.

[Heatth]

I have a friend who may help. She suggested Wordpress and FreeBeeHosting, if is a blog.

For a website she recomended this list (http://www.free-webhosts.com/free-php-webhosting.php).

What do you want exactly?

That friend said she could do it for us. But I guess we need know how it will be. The images, text (none of us are native english speakers) an so forth.

[Kaisos Erranon]

An official site for the VN.

[Heatth]

An official site for the VN.

This do not help :heh:

Well, it i a site, not a blog. Good (it is a start)

But how is going to be, the content and all.

[Jintor]

Temporal


"Every day, I climb this hill, and for some reason I never get tired of complaining about it. Whose idea was it to always build schools on top of large mountains?"

"Maybe one day I’ll have a heart attack from climbing this hill, and in the interest of public safety, they’ll have to level it off entirely, and rebuild the school where the hill used to be."

"My noble sacrifice will not be in vain!"

"…"

"No point in thinking about strange things this early in the morning. I'm at the gates already, anyway."

"And standing in front of the gates, talking to another girl with long hair, is Mikuru Asahina-san."

"Even as the other girl goes inside the gates, Asahina-san continues to stand there. Is she waiting for someone?"

"…Could she be waiting for me!?"


Kyon: "Asahina-saaaaan!"

Mikuru: "Ah! Kyon-kun! I was waiting for you!"


"She says with a slight blush. I’m so flattered, Asahina-san. I won’t keep you waiting ever again. I’ll get up at four in the morning from now on and wait for you instead."


Kyon: "It’s rare that I see you this early, Asahina-san. What’s up?"

Mikuru: "Kyon-kun… did you notice anything strange at all yesterday? Around the time when we were talking?"

"Something strange? No, not that I remember."

"Asahina-san gets closer to me, giving furtive looks left and right. From this distance, I can smell the sweet scent of her hair."


Mikuru: "My superiors contacted me yesterday, about classified information—um, I’ll try to put it in simpler terms… yesterday afternoon, there was a state of, um, temporal flux in the clubroom."

Kyon: "Temporal… flux?"

Mikuru: "Um, I’m sorry, I really can’t explain much, but for about fifteen minutes, our clubroom, um, was occupied by something."

Kyon: "Something classified?"

Mikuru: "…Yes."


"She looks away from me like she can’t think of much else to say. Also, I feel angry glares on my back from passing male students."

"I better wrap this conversation up quickly and get inside before I’m lynched! "

"Sorry, Asahina-san, but I can’t hold you close and comfort you here."

"Hmm…"

[DECISION POINT HERE]

1) "...Think it had something to do with last month?"
2) "...Leave it to me. If there’s any trouble, I’ll protect you."

IF RoutesClear >= 3, THEN

3) "...So, uh, Asahina-san, who were you talking to?"



Wounds Within


Kyon: "...Think it had something to do with last month?"

Mikuru: "…!"


"At my response, she abruptly turns around."


Mikuru: "Kyon-kun… can we please not talk about that?"

Kyon: "…Eh? Wait, no, Asahina-san, I didn’t mean to bring that-"

Mikuru: "It’s fine!"


"She turns around and flashes me a smile."


Mikuru: "I’ll see you in the clubroom later today, Kyon-kun."

Kyon: "Ah, right, bye."


"And she walks off without another word. I get the feeling I screwed up royally somewhere."

"Ah well. Better get to class."

"How much do you want to bet Haruhi will have made it there before me again? The odds are, unfortunately, against me."

"A thousand to one in her favor!"


False Bravado

Kyon: "Leave it me. If there’s any trouble, I’ll protect you!"


"Her face lights up immediately."


Mikuru: "Really? Thanks a lot, Kyon-kun!"


"Really. Even though, the last time we were in big trouble, I seem to remember cowering in a corner while Koizumi and Nagato did all the work."


Mikuru: "Even if you’re nowhere as strong as Koizumi-kun or Nagato-san, I really, really appreciate it."

"Wh--?"

"What is that supposed to mean? I never thought I’d hear something like that from Asahina-san’s sweet red lips!"

"Haruhi has been a bad influence on her. That must be it."

"Sigh."


Kyon: "Can I at least walk you to class?"

Mikuru: "Ah, um, no, that’d be… what if Suzumiya-san were to see us?"

Kyon: "Ah, right, yeah, good point."


"And with that, she waves and goes towards the school building, ready for class."

"Ah well. Guess I should be going too."

"How much do you want to bet Haruhi will have made it there before me again? The odds are, unfortunately, against me."

"A thousand to one in her favor!"



My Friend

Kyon: "So, uh, Asahina-san, who were you talking to?"


"Asahina-san looks surprised."


Mikuru: "Ah, that was my friend, Tsuruya-san. You remember her?"

Kyon: "How could I forget?"


"Tsuruya-san is one of the more interesting people I’ve ever met."


Mikuru: "I told her to go on ahead, since I was waiting for you… ah! Look, she’s up there!"

"I look where Asahina-san is pointing. Waving down at us out of a second floor window is a girl with long hair. At this distance, I can’t really see what she looks like, but I’m sure it’s"

Ripple.

"...What was that just now? It felt like something from a dream long forgotten, or something I should have remembered…"

"…What?"

"The world has, all of a sudden, been suffused with a deep... myrtle."

"Nothing moves. The world is dark. I can’t hear anything."

"What the hell is this?"


???: "…?"


"Did I just hear…?"


???: "…on-kun?"


"What? I hear a voice…"


Mikuru: "Kyon-kun? Are you okay?"

Kyon: "Ah, uh, yeah, I’m fine."


"Everything’s back. That was strange."

"…Am I losing it?"


"Ah, whatever, it’s all fine. Don’t look at me with eyes like that, Asahina-san, I’m fine. Just a momentary lapse in sanity. Perfectly normal."


Kyon: "Should I walk you to class?"

Mikuru: "Ah, um, no, that’s fine. Suzumiya-san might see…"

Kyon: "…Yeah, good point."


"And with that, she waves and goes towards the school building, ready for class.'

"Ah well. Guess I should be going too."

"Something weird is going on, though. And I bet Haruhi's at the root of it, yet again."

[scify]

I'm a little out of practice, but I can certainly whip up a basic webpage easily enough, as long as you guys give me a rough sketch of what you want everything to look like.

[Heatth]

I'm a little out of practice, but I can certainly whip up a basic webpage easily enough, as long as you guys give me a rough sketch of what you want everything to look like.

Eh, I guess I and that friend of mine are already goingto do this. If no one have any objection. A help would be welcome, tough.

[Akkuseru Jeshii]

lol, if you want something simple then I suggest piczo or something, or you could even take it literally and try 'make my own website' on google

I tried it a while ago to get my webcomic up and running but I couldn't find anything specific enough for a comic itself, and ended up using Drunkduck

[CanadaAotS]

Ah, I see what you were talking about now Kaisos, with the green text. Yeah, I have a few ideas on how to handle it. I was thinking along the lines of the overlay, like in the previous screenshot.

In normal scenes the green text gets called up along with the narrator/speaker text. On special scenes, the normal scene is "paused" to let more green text flood the scene, so clicks would forward the green text lines rather then the normal chat text. Pretty sure Ren'py can do that.

[swtrooper42]

Ren'py can do anything if you program it right. It's quite a good program.

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

Most "Make Your Own ___" programs are like that, actually.

[Sute443]

An official site for the VN.

So very unhelpful. What kind of features do you want? How fancy? Exactly what function will it serve in relation to the VN? These are what we need to know before we can definitely say if any of us are qualified to run it.

Oh, I guess Heatth and his friend are probably going to do it. Still, for future reference...

[besieger]

Probably something close to an actual VN site would be something to Kaisos' taste. But for now, we'll need to at least announce the project and provide a simple synopsis.

[Joe4evr]

Dammit guys.

Sigh... if anyone can suggest a good (free) webhost I guess I can relearn stuff... but I'm not that talented.I use 000webhost (http://www.000webhost.com/), but I'm not sure if 1500 MB of space is going to be enough...

[CanadaAotS]

TL;DR?


September the First, Day Zero, Universe A

Morning- Another End, Another Eight
Background: Kyon's Room
No change required from Universe 1
Sprites: Kyonko no Otouto
Background: Kyon's Kitchen
No change required from Universe 1
Special Effects: Green text
In this scene the green text should appear as an overlay on the scene (just above the player's textbox. I have a good reason for that placement...) It should appear inbetween two lines, and disappear along with the line after it. ie.
Kyonko “Well, actually, I guess it would be more accurate to say that I’m an ordinary 610-year-old first-year high-school student. “
[After above line has been cleared, the next click, auto-scroll, etc. brings in the floating Green Text line. It should appear before the next line starts]
Green Text “Seen this before... boring!”
[The Green text line stays on the screen for the upcoming line]
Kyonko “I’m not lying. I just spent the last 594 years of my life in a perpetual time loop comprised of the last two weeks of August.”
[The Green text disappears along with the previous line]
A “typed out” effect, where letters appear in-order individually would work well for later scenes that have multiple lines.
End of Morning- Another End, Another Eight

Classroom- Another Ordinary Day
Black screen until the “We're now back in the classroom for a short meeting...” line. Alternatively, you could have an “Outside the School” background till Kyonko gets to this line.
Background: Kyon's Class
Same as Universe 1
Sprites: Taniguchi (female), Kunikida (female)
“This is my friend Taniguchi...” Taniguchi appears.
“This girl is also my friend, Kunikida...” Kunikida appears.
“Right, thanks. Nevermind.” Taniguchi and Kunikida disappear.
“This is Haruki Suzumiya...” Haruki appears.
*FFFfZzttt...* effect, same as *KSSSSSSHHH*? It's purpose is to skip ahead in time a bit rather then switch universes, right?
End of Classroom- Another Ordinary Day

Brigade HQ- Poker in a Clubroom
Background: Outside the Old School Building
Same as Universe 1
Sprites: Haruki. Yuuki. Mitsuuru. Itsuko. Kyonko.
When Kyonko starts listing off brigade members, each one should appear on screen as their name is called out till all five are present at the end.
On the line “Anyway. I'm in the clubroom now, and school's out” the background should cut to the clubroom. All the sprites from the previous introduction should disappear at the same time.
Background: Clubroom
Same as Universe 1.
Sprites: Itsuko
Itsuko's sprite should appear on her first line (“Would you like to play poker?”)
Special Effects: Green text
This scene contains the first example of multiple green text lines (and a green text rant).
Earlier, I said the placement should be just above the player textbox. The reason for this, is when there's more then one line of green text, they'll follow the same rules as before (display between lines, disappear after the next 'normal' line), however each line of green text 'pushes up' the last one, chatroom style. For example:
Kyonko “Anyway. I'm in the clubroom now, and school's out.”
[Above text is cleared off the player chatbox]
Green Text “TEXT. TEXT. TALKING. TEXT TEXT TEXT.”
[Appears just above the player chatbox]
Green Text “TEXT. TEXT. TALKING. TEXT TEXT TEXT.”
[Appears just above the player chatbox, the line previous is placed just above the line before]
(etc.)
Green Text “BLAH. TEXT. BLAH. BLAH. TALKING. BLAH. TEXT”
[Appears just above the player chatbox. At this point there should be 4 lines of “TEXT. TEXT. TALKING. TEXT TEXT TEXT.” above this line, depending on how many lines fit on one screen.]
There should be a slight space between each line, but if a single line is longer then the width of the screen, it should word wrap so that the space between the continuation and the beginning is smaller then it would be if it were a new line (for easy identification of separate lines of text).
*FFFfZzttt...* CG/Transition/Whatever
End of Brigade HQ- Poker in a Clubroom

Brigade HQ- Decision Point
Continuation of “Poker in a Clubroom”
Background: Clubroom
Sprites: Itsuko
End of Brigade HQ- Decision Point, Again

Library- It's Unique
Continuation of previous scene
Background: Clubroom
Sprites: Itsuko
“The echoing sounds of Itsuko's footsteps” Itsuko's sprite disappears.
Right after the green text “Very important things.” the scene cuts to the Library.
Background: School Library
Same as Universe 1.
Sprites: Yuuki
On Kyonko's line “Ah, there you are, Nagato!” Yuuki's sprite appears.
On the line “I leave Nagato behind” Yuuki's sprite disappears.
*KSSSSSSHHH* CG/Transition/Whatever
End of Library- It's Unique

Existentialism- Other World
Continuation of “Poker in a Clubroom”
Background: Clubroom
Sprites: Itsuko
Appears with scene, disappears with “I can hear Itsuko humming...”
Kyonko leaves, cut to the background of her room.
Background: Kyon's Room
Either still around late afternoon/early evening or already night time at this point.
*KSSSSSSHHH* CG/Transition/Whatever
End of Existentialism- Other World

Way Home- Professor Itsuko's Love-love Theory
Continuation of “Poker in a Clubroom”
Background: Clubroom
Sprites: Itsuko
“I head off down the stairs, Itsuko trailing behind”
Background: Outside the Old School Building
Scene cuts to Kyonko walking home with Itsuko
Background: On the Way Home
Same as Universe 1.
Sprite: Itsuko
Appears with the scene.
“And with that, Itsuko fell silent” is the cue for Itsuko's sprite to disappear.
*KSSSSSSHHH* CG/Transition/Whatever
End of Way Home- Professor Itsuko's Love-love Theory

Classroom- Shoutacon
Continuation of “Poker in a Clubroom”
Background: Clubroom
Sprites: Itsuko
“Leaving Itsuko chuckling to herself...” Itsuko's sprite disappears.
Scene cut to Outside Old School Building
Background: Outside Old School Building
Right after “I just want a little brother...” scene cut to Asahina's Classroom
Background: Asahina's Classroom
Same as Universe 1.
Sprites: Mitsuuru
Appears with background.
Special Effect: Screen shake
Cue at -----KRRRRRSSHHHHHHHCCCKKK---. Screen shake just seemed fitting for the sound effect, and the transition to the green text rant.
Special Effect: Green tint
Cue right after the screen shake. Whole screen, including player chatbox, background, Mitsuuru's sprite, etc. become tinted in green. Great effect for the upcoming green text rant.
Special Effect: Green text
Everything mentioned back when Kyonko was introducing the other brigade members applies here.
“Well, it's not really my business...” after the green text is finished is the cue for the green tint to turn off as well as a scene cut to Kyonko walking home.
Background: On the Way Home
Sprites: Mitsuuru
Mitsuuru appears. “Mitsuuru: Bye, Kyon-chan! See you tomorrow!”
Mitsuuru disappears.
*KSSSSSSHHH* CG/Transition/Whatever
End of Classroom- Shoutacon

Restaurant- Don't Waste Food
Continuation of “Poker in a Clubroom”
Background: Clubroom
Sprites: Itsuko
“She and I go our seperate ways...” Itsuko's sprite disappears. Cut to Outside Old School Building.
Background: Outside Old School Building
Right after the green text “Very important things” scene cut to Outside Kitaguchi Station.
Background: Outside Kitaguchi Station
Same as Universe 1.
Scene cut to inside the restaurant
Background: Inside the Restaurant
Same as Universe 1.
Sprites: Haruki
Appears at the start of the scene
Outside Kitaguchi background appears at the line “And so...”
Background: Outside Kitaguchi Station
Sprites: Haruki
Appears at “After we finished eating...”
*KSSSSSSHHH* CG/Transition/Whatever
End of Restaurant- Don't Waste Food

End of September the First, Day Zero, Universe A


September the First, Day Zero, Universe A – Art Checklist:
Backgrounds (0):
All the backgrounds used during this day have been used once in Universe 1 already.
Sprites (7):
Kyonko no Otouto
Taniguchi (female)
Kunikida (female)
Haruki
Yuuki
Mitsuuru
Itsuko
Kyonko

I'd like to know what you guys think about the idea I had for displaying the green text. It'd look pretty cool.

[Heatth]

About the checklist, there is a CG of Imouto waking up Kyon on Day 0. Bijovi posted here some time ago.

Your green text idea may be good, I think. Maybe hard to do (appearing down to up is not the standard), but probably possible.

Oh, yeah, on the day 0, I heave already done the 5th loop exctly as you said. A animation with all backgrounds looping.

I just read you checklists now, sorry. They are good, thanks.

[CanadaAotS]

Cool. That's not an Event CG though, is it? I thought it was just a normal scene with Imouto's sprite.

I guess I should find out from binjovi if he's making sprites for imouto/otouto or what.

[Heatth]

Cool. That's not an Event CG though, is it? I thought it was just a normal scene with Imouto's sprite.

I guess I should find out from binjovi if he's making sprites for imouto/otouto or what.

I am talking about this image:
http://www.100megsfree4.com/fstar/GBHS/Imouto%20CG%20Sample.png

Posted on 05/13. A CG, definitely

[Kaisos Erranon]

I love the idea for the green text, and also for its extended rant in the Mitsuuru subscene.

Also the *KSSSSSH* would be television static, and the "FFFZZzzT" (whatever :rolleyes:) effect be like a television turning off. The same effect is used at the end of each day, as well.

Can we do this in Renpy? Chaos;HEad abused it, but I doubt it used any kind of similar engine.

[Heatth]

I love the idea for the green text, and also for its extended rant in the Mitsuuru subscene.

Also the *KSSSSSH* would be television static, and the "FFFZZzzT" (whatever :rolleyes:) effect be like a television turning off. The same effect is used at the end of each day, as well.

Can we do this in Renpy? Chaos;HEad abused it, but I doubt it used any kind of similar engine.

Must be possible. I already did the *KSSSSSH*. But I don't know how to do this "FFFZZzzT". How exactly is this effect?

[Kaisos Erranon]

Must be possible. I already did the *KSSSSSH*. But I don't know how to do this "FFFZZzzT". How exactly is this effect?

...Play Chaos;HEad? :heh:

Or just turn off a television. Like that, yeah.

[Heatth]

...Play Chaos;HEad? :heh:

It is you sugestion for everything?:heh: I am still playing F/SN, can't effort more:p

Or just turn off a television. Like that, yeah.

Oh, I see. Don't have idea how:rolleyes:
I will try to learn. Or maybe Danchou knows. We can always just record it and make the game play when is necessary (more space consuming, though).

[Kaisos Erranon]

It is you sugestion for everything?:heh: I am still playing F/SN, can't effort more:p

I'm trying to further your VN education.


Oh, I see. Don't have idea how:rolleyes:
I will try to learn. Or maybe Danchou knows. We can always just record it and make the game play when is necessary (more space consuming, though).

There has to be some way to pull off trippy effects like that.

This VN is probably going to abuse trippy effects given my preferences, so I certainly hope Renpy can pull them off. :heh:

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

This VN is probably going to abuse trippy effects given my preferences, so I certainly hope Renpy can pull them off. :heh:

I look forward to at least one BAD END story being a string of Nightmare Fuel.

[Jintor]

Ah, the sweet smell of progress in the early early morning.

[Akkuseru Jeshii]

I am talking about this image:
http://www.100megsfree4.com/fstar/GBHS/Imouto%20CG%20Sample.png

Posted on 05/13. A CG, definitely

I love that image, Kyon's sister is without a doubt my 3rd favourite character from the original anime series

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

So adorable... when she's not being a brat. :heh:

[DJ_RockmanX]

Hm... the corresponding scene on the other side is going to be much more actiony methinks. Manga styled visuals with speed lines and sound effects perhaps?

[Kaisos Erranon]

MORNING WAKEUP MANEUVER!!!

I keep hearing Maaya Sakamoto's voice when I read that scene now. Damn you Diebuster.


Just a random observation I thought I'd mention: When we first started this project, I wrote the first (rather trippy) ripple scene. It included these lines:

Endless Eight. Endless recursion. A loop without end. A mobius strip.

The number eight turned on its side is Infinity.

Endless. Eight.


There's no escape. There's no escape from infinity.

What's funny is that now that the episodes are airing, people are talking about mobius strips and the meaning behind the title, i.e. infinity.

...Well, I found it funny.

[Jintor]

I thought that came inherent with the concept of infinity, that kind of fear. You can't process it, you just can't.

[Kaisos Erranon]

I thought that came inherent with the concept of infinity, that kind of fear. You can't process it, you just can't.

Yes. Exactly.

Which is why I loved Endless Eight. And then the anime ruined it. (Also, get online.)

At least this is why we have our visual novel. To make Endless Eight seem cool again. And to mock KadoAni.

[Akkuseru Jeshii]

Which is why I loved Endless Eight. And then the anime ruined it.

yeah I know, they're on about the 6th episode of the second season (re-airing of the seires) 5 of which are esentially the same episode, and 5 out of 14 is NOT a good chunk of the Haruhi pie to be used on the same thing

*sob* I was hoping for alot of new stuff...

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

At least this is why we have our visual novel. To make Endless Eight seem cool again. And to mock KadoAni.

And to make the characters suffer as many ways as possible!

yeah I know, they're on about the 6th episode of the second season (re-airing of the seires) 5 of which are esentially the same episode, and 5 out of 14 is NOT a good chunk of the Haruhi pie to be used on the same thing

*sob* I was hoping for alot of new stuff...

Not the place to be griping about the Endless Eight adaptation.

[CanadaAotS]

This VN is probably going to abuse trippy effects given my preferences, so I certainly hope Renpy can pull them off. :heh:
It's been said but, Ren'py can do almost anything. The problem with trippy effects in Ren'py though is that it'll chew through CPU when you play it. If you played Katawa Shoujo Act 1, you'll notice the fireworks scene on Shizune's End has this issue. It's fairly minor (at least on my system), but that's just fireworks...

I am talking about this image:
*img*
Posted on 05/13. A CG, definitely
Ah, I see. I've added it to my list.

Hm... the corresponding scene on the other side is going to be much more actiony methinks. Manga styled visuals with speed lines and sound effects perhaps?
Wait, so there's an Event CG on flipside as well? I'll add that in too.

Edit-
Not the place to be griping about the Endless Eight adaptation.
If only because we could probably fill up several pages of not-on-topic griping. lol

[Kaisos Erranon]

It's been said but, Ren'py can do almost anything. The problem with trippy effects in Ren'py though is that it'll chew through CPU when you play it. If you played Katawa Shoujo Act 1, you'll notice the fireworks scene on Shizune's End has this issue. It's fairly minor (at least on my system), but that's just fireworks...

We should have an "FX OFF" option in the config menu. More options are always good.

Late For Class


I won?

At a thousand to one odds, I won?

Classroom 1-5’s atmosphere is always overwhelmingly oppressive. This is, of course, because it contains Haruhi Suzumiya.

Not, however, today. Today, for one of the first times ever, I have arrived before her.

This is excellent! What do I win?

Nothing?

Depressed, I collapse into my chair and flop forward onto my desk. Such is the life of someone who cannot truly win at anything.

There are those who are even less fortunate than I am, however.


???: Kyon…


Go away, I’m trying to catch a few minutes of shuteye before class.

He’s started to shake me. I suppose I must wake up.


Kunikida: Kyon, I need your help.


It’s Kunikida, who looks uncharacteristically nervous.


Kyon: …Help with what?

Kunikida: Ahaha. Since you’re in Suzumiya-san’s weird club, you probably know a lot of great and mysterious hiding places, right?

Kyon: …Not really.

Kunikida: Uh… Well, at least let me hide under your desk today, okay?

Kyon: What’s up with you today?

Kunikida: Well, uh, see, it’s kinda…


At that moment, the classroom door slammed open. There is, of course, only one person who would do this:

…Taniguchi!?


Taniguchi: Mornin’, Kyon. Hey, Kunikida!


He says, pointing a finger directly in an exasperated-looking Kunikida’s face.


Taniguchi: Remember what we discussed over the phone last night?

Kunikida: Yes. I remember. We talked for six hours. How could I not remember?


What’s going on? I’m confused.


Kunikida: Taniguchi got it in his mind that—

Taniguchi: Today we’re going to find girlfriends!

Kunikida: Could you maybe not announce it like it’s already decided?


It emerged that after his apparent heartbreak yesterday, Taniguchi decided he was tired of being single, so he somehow roped Kunikida into his plan to spend the next two weeks trolling for women across town. I wish them both luck.


Kunikida: Hey, don’t you say it like it’s already decided too!

Taniguchi: I don’t see why you’re so against this. You’re getting a girlfriend out of it, man!

Kunikida: Well, let’s see. There’s no guarantee we’ll actually be able to pick up girls, being with you would reduce my chances even further, and it’s eating up my time after school. I mean, it’d be great if I could get a girlfriend, but…

Taniguchi: Yeah! So that’s why we’re gonna do it!

Kunikida: Please don’t just decide things for me.

Taniguchi: Wanna rock-paper-scissors over it?

Kunikida: …Alright, I’ll go.


I wish them both luck.


Taniguchi: Aw, come on, buddy, don’t be like that. You can come too! Women feel more at ease when it’s a group of guys.

Kunikida: Yeah, Kyon, come with us. At least with you around we might have a fighting chance…

Kyon: Sorry, but I must decline. I have club activities every day, after all, so I can’t come with you.


This is one of the few times I am truly glad to be a part of the SOS Brigade.

The last few minutes before homeroom were spent with Taniguchi mumbling about something or other and Kunikida glaring at me like I betrayed him. And, as the bell rang, Haruhi quickly slid open the door and into her seat.


I turned around at my seat and grinned at her.


Kyon: Haruhi.

Haruhi: What?

Kyon: You’re late.


The look on her face tells me she that she'd like to hit me for that.


Bleh, I don't like how I did this one. Writing Kunikida is always difficult.

The rock-paper-scissors thing is a reference to this fanfic (http://www.baka-tsuki.org/forums/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=379), which is one of the best I've ever seen, if anyone was wondering.

[Heatth]

It's been said but, Ren'py can do almost anything. The problem with trippy effects in Ren'py though is that it'll chew through CPU when you play it. If you played Katawa Shoujo Act 1, you'll notice the fireworks scene on Shizune's End has this issue. It's fairly minor (at least on my system), but that's just fireworks...
"chew through CPU", what this mean? (sorry, not native speaker)
Oh, and what is "trippy effects"?
Anyway, I might have figured a way to do the "TV turning off" effect. But I will need a help from someone skiled on photoshop. Any volunteers? (And you Canada? Danchou said you may know.)


Ah, I will play that Chaos;HEad, eventually. I guess that since I am making a VN, I must learn more aboute then right?

[Kaisos Erranon]

Ah, I will play that Chaos;HEad, eventually. I guess that since I am making a VN, I must learn more aboute then right?

That you should, yessssss...

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

Bet Kyon was loving every moment at the end of that part. :heh:

[Kaisos Erranon]

Yeah. I figure he has to one-up her sometimes.


Also, in future, everyone... if you actually read what I've written, please, comment on it here.

It'd be so much better for motivation if I felt like what I do is appreciated. :heh:

[Heatth]

I haven't seen the scene because we posted almost at the same time (20:07).

I like this one. It is funny. Taniguchi is realy a good character. I find strange Kunikida being reluctant here, he didn't mind on Live a Live (maybe he get used to?). The end is good too.

And, Kaisos. I realy want to know what you want for the website. It was you who came with the idea, so you must have any idea right?

[Kaisos Erranon]

I haven't seen the scene because we posted almost at the same time (20:07).

I like this one. It is funny. Taniguchi is realy a good character. I find strange Kunikida being reluctant here, he didn't mind on Live a Live (maybe he get used to?). The end is good too.

In Live Alive, he was all "Have fun, Taniguchi, bye."


And, Kaisos. I realy want to know what you want for the website. It was you who came with the idea, so you must have any idea right?

I'm pretty sure I got your MSN... you don't seem to be online, though.

[CanadaAotS]

Yeah. I figure he has to one-up her sometimes.


Also, in future, everyone... if you actually read what I've written, please, comment on it here.

It'd be so much better for motivation if I felt like what I do is appreciated. :heh:

Honestly, I'm reading your work as I make the checklist. I caught up on the last 100 pages before I started posting again, but skipped the VN for later lol. Hopefully I'll catch up to you by the beginning of next week.

@Heatth
"Chew through CPU" simply means that it makes the CPU of your computer work harder then normal. ie, my computer's CPU went up to 30% usage or so during the scene I was talking about.

I have an example here of a "tv turning off" effect.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HcPQQ0ejhJ8#t=5s
The effect is characterized by black covering the screen from the top and bottom to the middle, with a white line in the center when they meet up.

[Heatth]

In Live Alive, he was all "Have fun, Taniguchi, bye."

Oh, yea, I missremember it.



I'm pretty sure I got your MSN... you don't seem to be online, though.

Well, that is weird. Im am also sure I got your MSN, and you dan't seem to be online. I will try to upload my msn or something.


"Chew through CPU" simply means that it makes the CPU of your computer work harder then normal. ie, my computer's CPU went up to 30% usage or so during the scene I was talking about.
I see. Thanks

I have an example here of a "tv turning off" effect.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HcPQQ0ejhJ8#t=5s
The effect is characterized by black covering the screen from the top and bottom to the middle, with a white line in the center when they meet up.

I see. I think I figured how.

If anyone here is good with photoshop, can please do an image for me? It is a black screen with that white horisontal line and "dot" on the center.

[Roger Rambo]

We should have an "FX OFF" option in the config menu. More options are always good.

Late For Class


I won?

At a thousand to one odds, I won?

Classroom 1-5’s atmosphere is always overwhelmingly oppressive. This is, of course, because it contains Haruhi Suzumiya.

Not, however, today. Today, for one of the first times ever, I have arrived before her.

This is excellent! What do I win?

Nothing?

Depressed, I collapse into my chair and flop forward onto my desk. Such is the life of someone who cannot truly win at anything.

There are those who are even less fortunate than I am, however.


???: Kyon…


Go away, I’m trying to catch a few minutes of shuteye before class.

He’s started to shake me. I suppose I must wake up.


Kunikida: Kyon, I need your help.


It’s Kunikida, who looks uncharacteristically nervous.


Kyon: …Help with what?

Kunikida: Ahaha. Since you’re in Suzumiya-san’s weird club, you probably know a lot of great and mysterious hiding places, right?

Kyon: …Not really.

Kunikida: Uh… Well, at least let me hide under your desk today, okay?

Kyon: What’s up with you today?

Kunikida: Well, uh, see, it’s kinda…


At that moment, the classroom door slammed open. There is, of course, only one person who would do this:

…Taniguchi!?


Taniguchi: Mornin’, Kyon. Hey, Kunikida!


He says, pointing a finger directly in an exasperated-looking Kunikida’s face.


Taniguchi: Remember what we discussed over the phone last night?

Kunikida: Yes. I remember. We talked for six hours. How could I not remember?


What’s going on? I’m confused.


Kunikida: Taniguchi got it in his mind that—

Taniguchi: Today we’re going to find girlfriends!

Kunikida: Could you maybe not announce it like it’s already decided?


It emerged that after his apparent heartbreak yesterday, Taniguchi decided he was tired of being single, so he somehow roped Kunikida into his plan to spend the next two weeks trolling for women across town. I wish them both luck.


Kunikida: Hey, don’t you say it like it’s already decided too!

Taniguchi: I don’t see why you’re so against this. You’re getting a girlfriend out of it, man!

Kunikida: Well, let’s see. There’s no guarantee we’ll actually be able to pick up girls, being with you would reduce my chances even further, and it’s eating up my time after school. I mean, it’d be great if I could get a girlfriend, but…

Taniguchi: Yeah! So that’s why we’re gonna do it!

Kunikida: Please don’t just decide things for me.

Taniguchi: Wanna rock-paper-scissors over it?

Kunikida: …Alright, I’ll go.


I wish them both luck.


Taniguchi: Aw, come on, buddy, don’t be like that. You can come too! Women feel more at ease when it’s a group of guys.

Kunikida: Yeah, Kyon, come with us. At least with you around we might have a fighting chance…

Kyon: Sorry, but I must decline. I have club activities every day, after all, so I can’t come with you.


This is one of the few times I am truly glad to be a part of the SOS Brigade.

The last few minutes before homeroom were spent with Taniguchi mumbling about something or other and Kunikida glaring at me like I betrayed him. And, as the bell rang, Haruhi quickly slid open the door and into her seat.


I turned around at my seat and grinned at her.


Kyon: Haruhi.

Haruhi: What?

Kyon: You’re late.


The look on her face tells me she that she'd like to hit me for that.


Bleh, I don't like how I did this one. Writing Kunikida is always difficult.

The rock-paper-scissors thing is a reference to this fanfic (http://www.baka-tsuki.org/forums/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=379), which is one of the best I've ever seen, if anyone was wondering.Why am I getting certian vibes from Kunkida and Taniguchi? It seems oddly familiar.

[Kaisos Erranon]

Why am I getting certian vibes from Kunkida and Taniguchi? It seems oddly familiar.

Because they never have character development in the show or novels proper outside of "we like girls lol", I figured "why not set them up as a typical manzai duo"?

It's mostly thanks to that fanfic I linked to. Read it and you'll probably understand. =P

[Heatth]

Oh, about that scene, it is kinda strange having a reference for a fanfic. It isn't even a "realy" famous fic right? The scene is enjoyable even without reading it, but feels somewhat odd. Something that isn't explained and is never going to be.

(Ah, did you recive a new invitation on msn? From a Yahoo! mail this time?)

[Kaisos Erranon]

Oh, about that scene, it is kinda strange having a reference for a fanfic. It isn't even a "realy" famous fic right? The scene is enjoyable even without reading it, but feels somewhat odd. Something that isn't explained and is never going to be.

Eh. Like I said, they have no personality anyway.


(Ah, did you recive a new invitation on msn? From a Yahoo! mail this time?)

No, no invitation, unfortunately. Dunno why.

[Heatth]

Eh. Like I said, they have no personality anyway.

It isn't about personality. Is the reference itself that is buging me. Taniguchi treats with a rock-paper-scissors and Kunikida gives up. It make sense if will did read the fic. But sounds out of blue if didn't.

No, no invitation, unfortunately. Dunno why.

*Sigh*

I will just give up them...

[otai]

Because they never have character development in the show or novels proper outside of "we like girls lol", I figured "why not set them up as a typical manzai duo"?

It's mostly thanks to that fanfic I linked to. Read it and you'll probably understand. =P

You mean they aren't a manzai duo already? Kunikida's a bit more childish than I expected. Still, it can't be said for sure. Kunikida has like 10% the character focus of Taniguchi, and Tanuguchi has like 0.1% the character focus in the novels.

IMHO, Kunikida is basically a very smart kid who decides to take it easy through life. A slacker.

[Kaisos Erranon]

IMHO, Kunikida is basically a very smart kid who decides to take it easy through life. A slacker.

So basically exactly like Kyon, then. :heh:

[Akkuseru Jeshii]

yeah, lol, just without the attitude

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

Most of Kyon's attitude is shown via internal monologues. It's entirely possible Kunikida has similar thoughts about things.

[Kaisos Erranon]

Most of Kyon's attitude is shown via internal monologues. It's entirely possible Kunikida has similar thoughts about things.

I'm debating doing an interlude where Kunikida narrates. It'd serve as a good bridging point for Day 2's main events, but I somehow feel as though it's a bad idea.

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

I really think we should just stick to Kyon and Kyonko for narration, as we already have something to go from with the two of them. Trying to have other narrators would be more troublesome than anything.

[CanadaAotS]

Got to be at work in half an hour, but I had some time to kill so here's the "Night time - Both Universes" section of the flowchart.

September the First, Day Zero, Night – Both Universes

My Room- Oyasumi
Background: Kyon's Room
Not much else to say about this scene. Nice green text in Universe 1, huhuhu...
End of My Room- Oyasumi

Our Room- Parallel Connection
Background: Kyon's Room
Sprites: Kyon, Kyonko
Sprites appear just before this line: “Kyon: Huh? - Kyonko: Eh?” And disappear right after. Nice one-liner where they both see each other for a split second.
Special Effects: Dual Text
Alright, so the suggestion I have here for this scene... I don't know if it's possible with Ren'py. Two player textboxes. If we have one at the top narrating Kyonko's lines, and one at the bottom narrating Kyon's lines, it would totally work out.
If this is impossible, another option is displaying two lines at once in the normal chatbox. The text would have to be formatted of course so exactly two lines worth of each character's text can fit in at once. This option would be a lot easier to code then the former, I'm sure... lol.
End of Our Room- Parallel Connection

September the First, Day Zero, Night – Both Universes

There's no checklist required, since there's nothing new introduced art-wise in these scenes.

I'm too lazy to edit the text inside the spoiler, but I just remembered that it's definitely possible to have two text boxes. One scene in Katawa Shoujo had Emi and Rin both say Eh? at the same time using two separate boxes. Considering that it's doable, I'd say that's a far better then the "Two lines of text in one box" option.

Edit: Reading over "Day One, Breakfast with Little Brother" now, Kyonko: "...Can I please sleep somewhere else?"
I see what you did there. doh ho ho.
Edit2: This is Morning Wakeup Attack right here, except imagine if he jumped off the corner of the ring - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=L_3Zi6t7W4s#t=18s

[DJ_RockmanX]

Poor Kyon-chan.

[Ithekro]

It is always "poor Kyon-chan". This is just how it works...unless it is "poor Kyon" but then it is because of Haruhi.

[besieger]

Ren'py is based on Python after all. Python, unless you're using the most efficient implementation, will chew up CPU resources quick.

They probably should have recompiled it in C.

[Kaisos Erranon]

Man this one took a while.

Totally Unreasonable

IF DebtSlave = False THEN

After a few hours of the usual boring classes, it has become lunchtime.


Haruhi: Kyon, go remake our website.


I stretch, releasing the tension one builds up from sitting down for too long, and reach into my bag for my lunch.


Haruhi: Hey, don’t ignore me! Go remake our website.

Kyon: Why!?


Besides, since when is it ‘our’ website? The entire thing was your idea in the first place!


Haruhi: The reason it’s not getting any hits is because it doesn’t look interesting enough! So you’re going to make it as unique as possible!


Sigh… yes, Haruhi-sama. I live to serve my Brigade Chief. Can I at least eat my lunch first?

‘Eat your lunch while you work!’ is her response. Suddenly, I’m reminded of Taniguchi and Kunikida’s performance this morning.

Do I look like that to outsiders? I hope not.


[Scene: Clubroom]

As usual, Nagato is reading some hardcover. Greeting her as I enter the room, I sit in the Chief’s chair and fire up the computer.

It took me a while to remember how to use the proper software, but before long I had the page up, ready for editing.

This really takes me back. The first time I worked on our website was long ago, back when we were just starting out as a Brigade. Koizumi hadn’t even joined then.

Speaking of the devil…


Itsuki: Oh, hello.


Koizumi enters the clubroom.


Kyon: It’s rare to see you here. What’s up?

Itsuki: Nothing, really. Do you mind if I were to, ah, eat lunch here?

Kyon: Go right ahead. But don’t you normally eat with Haruhi in the cafeteria?

Itsuki: Whatever gave you that idea?


…He’s acting suspicious, but whatever. It’s not my problem.

Now, the website…

[DECISION POINT HERE]

1) “Nagato, do you have any ideas?”
2) “Koizumi, do you have any ideas?”
3) Do I have any ideas?


------

IF DebtSlave = True THEN


After a few hours of the usual boring classes, it has become lunchtime.

And since it’s become lunchtime, I am of course dragged to the cafeteria by Haruhi, who is still demanding that I buy her lunch.


Kyon: Nothing too expensive, okay? I don’t have much more money…

Haruhi: Tch. You ate my pasta. You don’t get to argue.


…Why is she so… ahh. It must be because I ran away yesterday.

I should probably make up for that.

So when Haruhi, her tray laden with overpriced food items (my poor wallet!) headed toward the tables, I asked:


Kyon: So, where are we sitting?

Haruhi: You’re not sitting anywhere. You’re going to go to the clubroom and remake our website.

Kyon: Huh? Why?

Haruhi: Because the Brigade Chief told you to. Chop chop! Hurry up or you won’t finish before lunch hour.


Sigh… yes, Haruhi-sama. I live to serve.

On my way out of the cafeteria, however, I was accosted by a familiar face.


Itsuki: What are you doing here?

Kyon: Oh, hey. Haruhi just made me buy her lunch…

Itsuki: Really. Why would that be?

Kyon: …I really don’t want to get into it. I gotta hurry, so I’ll see you after school.

Itsuki: …See you then.

He heads over with a lunchbox towards where… Haruhi is sitting.

…I really should get going if I don’t want to face her wrath for the second time today.


[Scene: Clubroom]

As usual, Nagato is reading some hardcover. Greeting her as I enter the room, I sit in the Chief’s chair and fire up the computer.

It took me a while to remember how to use the proper software, but before long I had the page up, ready for editing.

This really takes me back. The first time I worked on our website was long ago, back when we were just starting out as a Brigade. Koizumi hadn’t even joined then.

Speaking of the devil…


Itsuki: Ah.


Koizumi enters the clubroom.


Kyon: What happened to eating lunch with Haruhi?

Itsuki: Could we please not discuss that?

Kyon: Sure, whatever.

…He’s acting odd, but it’s not my problem.

Now, the website…

[DECISION POINT HERE]

1) “Nagato, do you have any ideas?”
2) “Koizumi, do you have any ideas?”
3) Do I have any ideas?


------

Totally Doing it Wrong

Kyon: Nagato, do you have any ideas for improving the website?


I feel as though I’ve asked this question before.


Yuki: None.


Well, I suppose that’s no surprise. I’ll just have to think of something.


Yuki: Wait

Kyon: Hmm? What is it?

Yuki: Please let me use the computer. I have an idea.

Kyon: Alright then, if you want.


When Nagato sits down in the Chief’s chair, the first thing she does is pick up the mouse and… move it around in the air.


Yuki: I cannot move the cursor.


I sense Koizumi trying to hide his sniggering. Stop laughing, it’s not funny.


Kyon: Sigh… Nagato, that’s… that’s not how you use a mouse. Have you ever used a computer before at all?

Yuki: No.


And so my lunch hour was spent teaching Nagato the basics of computer usage. Thankfully, she learns quickly.

When Koizumi and I left the room, she was still messing with the website software.


Itsuki: She’s an apt pupil. Or are you just a good teacher?

Kyon: Shut up. Nagato, don’t be late for class, okay?

Yuki: I will be fine. Thank you.


Good grief. To be frank, I’m curious to see what she’ll come up with.

…I just hope Haruhi’s pleased with it, or I’ll never hear the end of it.

…

*KSSSSSH*


Totally Verbose

Kyon: Koizumi, do you have any ideas for improving the website?


I get the feeling asking him might be a bad idea, but I don’t have many ideas of my own.


Itsuki: Hmm? Well, I suppose it is rather bland, isn’t it? Well, it could definitely use more color.


More color…


Itsuki: Definitely brighter colors. We want to seem friendly, do we not?


Brighter colors, got that…


Itsuki: Ah, and Suzumiya-san probably won’t allow it, but replacing the, er, logo with something a bit less… kitsch… would probably be a good idea.


Definitely something I agree with.


Itsuki: Perhaps adding more pages would be a good start as well. In that case, you could use the current page as the main page or a splash page that one sees upon entry.


I’m beginning to see why Haruhi thinks Koizumi is so useful, as loath as I am to admit it.


Kyon: Thanks, I’ve got—

Itsuki: You could also learn animation and add a bit more flair to the site.

Kyon: Nah, that’d take to long, and I just want to get this—

Itsuki: In fact, I think the site could be most improved by changing it completely. Why not make a “Mikuru Asahina: Maid Idol” fansite, for instance? And post those pictures?

Kyon: …

Itsuki: It’d certainly get more hits than the site is currently getting.

Kyon: I’m never asking you for advice again.

Itsuki: I’m joking, joking. My earlier suggestions were perfectly serious.


I crumple the paper I was writing his suggestions on and throw it in the corner.


Itsuki: Very well.


And so I spent the rest of lunch hour surfing the Internet out of sheer boredom. As a result, when it was time to go back to class, nothing had gotten done on the website.

I’ll have to think up some excuse for the meeting today.

As Koizumi and I left the clubroom, the last thing I saw was Nagato staring intently at the computer.

…

*KSSSSSH*



Totally None

Well, let’s see. Do I have any ideas for improving the website?

Totally none at all!

And so I spent the rest of lunch hour surfing the Internet out of sheer boredom. As a result, when it was time to go back to class, nothing had gotten done on the website.

I’ll have to think up some excuse for the meeting today.

As Koizumi and I left the clubroom, the last thing I saw was Nagato staring intently at the computer.

…

*KSSSSSH*


This might be confusing to read, and also the quality might be suffering, I'm tired.

Although it isn't in the flowchart, choosing to ask Nagato triggers the "ComputerLesson" variable.

[DJ_RockmanX]

Reads alright to me. We'll see how our Senior Editor-san thinks soon enough.

Also, how many of the flowcharts am I going to have to retouch when all is said and done?

[Kaisos Erranon]

Also, how many of the flowcharts am I going to have to retouch when all is said and done?

All of them? >_>

Flux

One of these days.

One of these days I’ll lose my mind while climbing this hill. This huge, enormous hill.

No, I refuse to stop complaining about it. I will complain as long as I want, thank you very much.

Someone please get me the idiot who decided North High would be at the top of a hill. I’ll introduce him to Haruki, saying that his dream has always been to wear a French maid uniform. That’ll teach him.

Heh heh, I can imagine it right now. The catharsis will be wonderful—oh, I’m already at the gates. That was surprisingly fast.


???: Kyon-chan!


And waiting for me there is, to my surprise, Asahina-senpai.


Kyonko: Good morning!

Mitsuuru: I was waiting for you, Kyon-chan.


Ah, I’m so happy. Not sure why, though.

Asahina-senpai seems to have completely recovered from yesterday. I also notice that he has his school uniform back. Does he have spares?


Mitsuuru: Would you believe it? Suzumiya-san actually came by late last night and dropped off my uniform! He even apologized for taking it.

Kyonko: You’re kidding.


I just can’t see Haruki doing something that nice. He’s clearly planning something evil. Watch out, Asahina-senpai!


Kyonko: So, why exactly were you waiting for me?

Mitsuuru: I was just wondering. While you were with me in the clubroom, did you notice anything strange?


…Eh? Didn’t I hear something exactly like this last night?

[Note: This following line is a flashback.]
Big Mitsuuru: Listen to me very carefully, Kyon-chan. What exactly happened today? Anything out of the ordinary?


…This again.


Kyonko: Not… really. Why? Did something happen?

Mitsuuru: …It’s classified, so it’s hard for me to explain, but… for fifteen minutes, there was a state of temporal flux in the clubroom. You and I were at the center of it.


I didn’t notice anything at all. Am I that unobservant?


Mitsuuru: For that period of time, you and I effectively ceased to exist.

Kyonko: Wait, hold on. Ceased to exist? That’s crazy, I remember exactly what happened in those fifteen minutes. We talked, right?

Mitsuuru: That’s exactly it. My superiors say we vanished completely, but I remember all of it…

Kyonko: …So, what’s really going on here?

Mitsuuru: …

Kyonko: …

Mitsuuru: Um, want me to walk you as far as the first-year hallway?

Kyonko: Good idea, thanks.


Brrr. I felt that chill.

What the hell is happening to me!?

And if that wasn’t enough, as I passed through the school entrance, I heard it again. Far above my head.

A ripple.


I did better here, I think.

I think.

[vivify93]

Hell, I say what you write is pure genius and literary talent.

[besieger]

Just don't pick academic subjects that require lots of writing in post-sec, Kaisos. You'll lose interest in this like a concrete anchor in water. :heh:

[scify]

Unless there's a lot of technical writing involved... then this might be an escape.

I used to be a middling creative writer. Now all I ever write are papers. :(

[besieger]

Unless there's a lot of technical writing involved... then this might be an escape.

I used to be a middling creative writer. Now all I ever write are papers. :(

Don't remind me. I needed to document an entire build server and how it runs.

FUN.

[Sho-tan]

Man this one took a while.

Totally Unreasonable

Totally Doing it Wrong

Kyon: Nagato, do you have any ideas for improving the website?


I feel as though I’ve asked this question before.

Yuki: ...

Guess that means no.Well, I suppose that’s no surprise. I’ll just have to think of something.

As I reach for the mouse, my hand brushes against something. I turn around to see Nagato staring at the monitor.

Kyon: Hmm? What is it?

Yuki: I have an idea.

Kyon: Alright then, go ahead.


When Nagato sits down in the Chief’s chair, the first thing she does is pick up the mouse and… move it around in the air.


Yuki: I cannot move the cursor.


I sense Koizumi trying to hide his sniggering. Stop laughing, it’s not funny.


Kyon: Sigh… Nagato, that’s… that’s not how you use a mouse. Have you ever used a computer before at all?

Yuki: No.


And so my lunch hour was spent teaching Nagato the basics of computer usage. Thankfully, she learns quickly.

When Koizumi and I left the room, she was still messing with the website software.


Itsuki: She’s an apt pupil. Or are you just a good teacher?

Kyon: Shut up. Nagato, don’t be late for class, okay?

Yuki: I will be fine.


Good grief. To be frank, I’m curious to see what she’ll come up with.

…I just hope Haruhi’s pleased with it, or I’ll never hear the end of it.

…

*KSSSSSH*


This might be confusing to read, and also the quality might be suffering, I'm tired.

Although it isn't in the flowchart, choosing to ask Nagato triggers the "ComputerLesson" variable.

The Nagato bit seemed a little... off, the areas in bold are where I made changes. It's really just a suggestion.

[Joe4evr]

Oh, and what is "trippy effects"?"Trippy" means as if you were stoned and tripping. Kinda like SHAFT anime.:heh:

[Jintor]

At least this is why we have our visual novel. To make Endless Eight seem cool again. And to mock KadoAni.

No, that's why you have this visual novel. I'm here to gain experience working with a team on a collaborative project and to practice my editing/writing.

Eees not aboot you, ye ken

[Kaisos Erranon]

Just don't pick academic subjects that require lots of writing in post-sec, Kaisos. You'll lose interest in this like a concrete anchor in water. :heh:

Tooooooo late.

The Nagato bit seemed a little... off, the areas in bold are where I made changes. It's really just a suggestion.

Yuki always responds to Kyon, but I do like your changes. They work.

No, that's why you have this visual novel. I'm here to gain experience working with a team on a collaborative project and to practice my editing/writing.

Eees not aboot you, ye ken

Since when are you Scottish.

Last rewrite for at least 12 hours. Enjoy.

So Very Unreasonable

The school day passed normally. Well, as normal as it ever gets around here.

As the bell for lunch rang, I stretched and reached for my lunchbox. Because I can never get up in the mornings, I’m always sure to prepare my lunch the previous night. I’m really looking forward to eating it.


Haruki: Kyon! I have a job for you!


Of course. I can’t have a single moment of happiness. That’d be too much to ask.


Haruki: Your mission today is (drumroll, please) …to make our website manlier!

Kyonko: …Exactly what does that mean?

Haruki: Hell if I know.


He admitted it!


Haruki: I was just looking at the site yesterday. It sucks.

Kyonko: And whose fault is that?

Haruki: Yours. You were the one that made the site, right?


So now, because that’s an argument I can’t even hope to win, I’m taking my lunchbox to the clubroom to inject some testosterone into our website.

On the way there…


Itsuko: Ah, there you are. I was looking for you.

Kyonko: Oh! Hi. What’s up?


She’s leaning comfortably against a wall, as though she expected me to come this way. Um. Is my route to the clubroom that predictable?


Itsuko: I just wanted to discuss what happened to you yesterday.

Kyonko: Huh. Really?


[DECISION POINT HERE]

1) What happened yesterday?
2) You know about that?


Look of Pity

Kyonko: What happened yesterday?

Itsuko: …


She looks at me with an expression I’ve never seen on her before… is that… pity?!


Kyonko: Don’t give me that look.

Itsuko: …Sigh. You do know what I’m talking about, correct? The temporal flux yesterday?

Kyonko: Oh! That. Yes, I know about that. Of course. Haha.


I’m an idiot.


Itsuko: Would you walk with me while we talk? I have something to pick up in the clubroom anyway.

Kyonko: Sure.


I’ve noticed before, but Itsuko walks in a way that accentuates her hips. I’m not quite sure whether it’s intentional or not, though it probably is, knowing her.


Itsuko: So you didn’t notice anything at all? Nothing?

Kyonko: No, well, except…

Itsuko: Except what?

Kyonko: I heard the sound of water dripping. It sounded like a ripple.

Itsuko: Odd.

Kyonko: And, well, I haven’t told anyone else this, but… two nights ago, I saw someone in my room.

Itsuko: You saw someone? Who was it?

Kyonko: I don’t know. It was only for like a millisecond, but I can swear I saw him.

Itsuko: Him? Are you sure it was male?

Kyonko: Well, I got the impression of someone a lot larger than me, so I assumed it was a guy.


Itsuko stops walking for a minute, with her finger to her lips.


Itsuko: This is all very strange. I’ve never heard of anything quite like this.

Kyonko: I figured we could go ask Nagato…

Itsuko: That would be a good idea. Also, I would like you to call me next time something like this happens to you.

Kyonko: Yeah. Really, it’s kind of cree—


We turn a corner, and—

Control.

Alt.

Delete.

A bad joke.

Everyone present laughs out of politeness.

It’s the end!

My brain is filled with the sounds of ripples.

*KSSSSSH*

Wouldn’t You Like to Know?
[Note: Yes I changed the title again here. The last one no longer works with how the scene has to play out.]

Kyonko: You know about that?


Itsuko crosses her fingers in front of her mouth.


Itsuko: Indeed I do. I know that you spent yesterday in a state of temporal flux, and were contacted by Mitsuuru Asahina-san about it.

Kyonko: How do you learn these things so quickly!?

Itsuko: Fufu. That’s a secret~. One that you’ll never know.


…I just suspect her Agency just has a lot of spies. Everywhere. Including those hiding in parks in the dead of night.


Itsuko: Would you walk with me while we talk? I have something to pick up in the clubroom anyway.

Kyonko: Yeah, sure.


I’ve noticed before, but Itsuko walks in a way that accentuates her hips. I’m not quite sure whether it’s intentional or not, though it probably is, knowing her.


Itsuko: So you didn’t notice anything at all? Nothing?

Kyonko: No, well, except…

Itsuko: Except what?

Kyonko: I heard the sound of water dripping. It sounded like a ripple.

Itsuko: Odd.

Kyonko: And, well, I haven’t told anyone else this, but… two nights ago, I saw someone in my room.

Itsuko: You saw someone? Who was it?

Kyonko: I don’t know. It was only for like a millisecond, but I can swear I saw him.

Itsuko: Him? Are you sure it was male?

Kyonko: Well, I got the impression of someone a lot larger than me, so I assumed it was a guy.


Itsuko stops walking for a minute, with her finger to her lips.


Itsuko: This is all very strange. I’ve never heard of anything quite like this.

Kyonko: I figured we could go ask Nagato…

Itsuko: That would be a good idea. Also, I would like you to call me next time something like this happens to you.

Kyonko: Yeah. Really, it’s kind of cree—


We turn a corner, and—

Control.

Alt.

Delete.

A bad joke.

Everyone present laughs out of politeness.

It’s the end! Or is it the beginning?

My brain is filled with the sounds of ripples.

*KSSSSSH*

[Heatth]

Yuki always responds to Kyon, but I do like your changes. They work.





Not always true. She didn't respond about the alien language in Banboo Leef. The changes works better then yours. Another suggestion would be Yuki staring him until he notice, insted brushing his sholders (it was how she showed interest on otello). I also feel strange Yuki thanking in the end.

The scenes are good. I love Haruki, I find him hilarious. The first one might be somewhat confusing, but I liked it. I like how a previous choice changed so "much". It is nothing big, but feels more interactive.

[Sho-tan]

Well, I actually meant it to be Kyon moving his hand to the mouse, and coming into contact with Nagato's sleeve. Not Nagato tapping him on the shoulder. I've made slight edits in my previous post to reflect this.

[Heatth]

Oh, I see. Yeah, I think it is better now.

*e*

(just saw now):


I'm too lazy to edit the text inside the spoiler, but I just remembered that it's definitely possible to have two text boxes. One scene in Katawa Shoujo had Emi and Rin both say Eh? at the same time using two separate boxes. Considering that it's doable, I'd say that's a far better then the "Two lines of text in one box" option.

Already done ^^
Actually, after discussing it with Danchou, we are going to make both lines appear in the same box, one above the other, but at same time.

The two box side-by-side work bette for when two characters are speaking at same time, I think.

[Jintor]

Totally Unreasonable

IF DebtSlave = False THEN

"After a few hours of the usual boring classes, it's now become lunchtime. Finally."


Haruhi: "Kyon, go remake our website."


"I stretch and yawn, releasing the tension one builds up from sitting down for too long, and reach into my bag for my lunch."


Haruhi: "Hey, don’t ignore me, moron! Go - remake - our website!"

Kyon: "...Why!?"


"...I think I just failed at ignoring her."

"Besides, since when is it ‘our’ website? The entire thing was your idea in the first place!"


Haruhi: "The reason it’s not getting any hits is because it doesn’t look interesting enough! So you’re going to make it as unique as possible!"


"Sigh…

"...yes, Haruhi-sama. I live but to serve my Brigade Chief."

"Can I at least eat my lunch first?"

"‘Eat your lunch while you work!’ is her response. Suddenly, I’m reminded of Taniguchi and Kunikida’s performance this morning."

"Do I look like that to outsiders? I hope not."


[Scene: Clubroom]

"As usual, Nagato is reading some hardback novel. Greeting her as I enter the room, I sit in the Chief’s chair and fire up the computer."

"It took me a while to remember how to use the proper software, but before long I had the page up, ready for editing."

"This really takes me back. The first time I worked on our website was long ago, back when we were just starting out as a Brigade. Koizumi hadn’t even joined then."

"Speak of the devil…"


Itsuki: "Oh, hello."

Kyon: "It’s rare to see you here. What’s up?"

Itsuki: "Nothing, really. Do you mind if I were to, ah, eat lunch here?"

Kyon: "Go right ahead. But don’t you normally eat with Haruhi in the cafeteria?"

Itsuki: "Whatever gave you that idea?"


"…He’s acting suspicious, but whatever. He always acts suspicious."

"Now, as for the website…"

[DECISION POINT HERE]

1) “'Nagato, do you have any ideas?'”
2) “'Koizumi, do you have any ideas?'”
3) "Do I have any ideas?"


------

IF DebtSlave = True THEN


"After a few hours of the usual boring classes, it's now become lunchtime."

"And since it’s become lunchtime, I am of course being dragged to the cafeteria by Haruhi, who is still demanding that I buy her lunch."


Kyon: "N-Nothing too expensive, okay? I don’t have much more money…!"

Haruhi: "Tch. You ate my pasta! You don’t get to argue."


"…Why is she so- gah. It must be because I ran away yesterday. "

"I should... probably make up for that."

"So when Haruhi, her tray laden with overpriced food items (my poor wallet!) headed toward the tables, I asked:"


Kyon: "So, where are we sitting?"

Haruhi: "You’re not sitting anywhere. You’re going to go to the clubroom and remake our website."

Kyon: "...Huh? Why?"

Haruhi: "Because the Brigade Chief told you to. Chop chop! Hurry up or you won’t finish before lunch hour!"


"Sigh… yes, Haruhi-sama. I am but your humble servant.."

"On my way out of the cafeteria, however, I was accosted by a familiar, smiling face."


Itsuki: "It's rare to see you here. What's up?"

Kyon: "Oh, hey. Haruhi just made me buy her lunch…"

Itsuki: "Really. And why would that be?"

Kyon: "…I really don’t want to get into it. I gotta hurry, so I’ll see you after school."

Itsuki: "…See you, then."

"He heads over with a lunchbox towards where… Haruhi is sitting."

"…I really should get going if I don’t want to face her wrath for the second time today."


[Scene: Clubroom]

"As usual, Nagato is reading some hardback novel. Greeting her as I enter the room, I sit in the Chief’s chair and fire up the computer."

"It took me a while to remember how to use the proper software, but before long I had the page up, ready for editing."

"This really takes me back. The first time I worked on our website was long ago, back when we were just starting out as a Brigade. Koizumi hadn’t even joined then."

"Speak of the devil…"


Itsuki: "...yo?"

Kyon: "What happened to eating lunch with Haruhi?"

Itsuki: "...Could we please not discuss that?"

Kyon: "Sure, whatever."


"…He’s acting oddly, but he always acts oddly."

"Now, the website…"

[DECISION POINT HERE]

1) “Nagato, do you have any ideas?”
2) “Koizumi, do you have any ideas?”
3) Do I have any ideas?


------

Totally Doing it Wrong

Kyon: "Nagato, do you have any ideas for improving the website?"


"I feel as though I’ve asked this question before."


Yuki: "..."


"Guess that means no. Well, I suppose that’s no surprise. I’ll just have to think of something."

"As I reach for the mouse, my hand brushes against something. I turn around to see Nagato staring at the monitor."


Kyon: "Hmm? What is it?"

Yuki: "...?"


"She lifts her hand slowly, pointing at the computer."


Kyon: "Alright then, go ahead."


"When Nagato sits down in the Chief’s chair, the first thing she does is pick up the mouse and… wave it around in the air."


Yuki: "...no response."


"I sense Koizumi trying to hide his sniggering. Stop laughing, it’s not funny."


Kyon: "… Nagato, that’s… that’s not how you use a mouse. Have you ever... used a computer before at all?"


"A tiny shake of the head."

"And so my lunch hour was spent teaching Nagato the basics of computer usage. Thankfully, she learns quickly."

"When Koizumi and I left the room, she was still messing with the website software."


Itsuki: "She’s an apt pupil. Or are you just a good teacher?"

Kyon: "Shut up. Nagato, don’t be late for class, okay?"

Yuki: "...I will be fine."


"She turns her head away from the screen momentarily to look solemnly at me, and nod her head a tiny fraction of an inch, just once, before returning to her self-designated task."

"Good grief. To be frank, I’m curious to see what she’ll come up with."

"…I just hope Haruhi’s pleased with it, or I’ll never hear the end of it."

"…"

"*KSSSSSH*"


Totally Verbose

Kyon: "Koizumi, do you have any ideas for improving the website?"


"I get the feeling asking him might be a bad idea, but I don’t have many ideas of my own."


Itsuki: "Hmm? Well, I suppose it is rather bland, isn’t it? Well, it could definitely use more color."


"More color…"


Itsuki: "Definitely brighter colors. We want to seem friendly, do we not?"


"Brighter colors, got that…"


Itsuki: "Ah, and Suzumiya-san probably won’t allow it, but replacing the, er, logo with something a bit less… kitsch… would probably be a good idea."


"Definitely something I agree with."


Itsuki: "Perhaps adding more pages would be a good start as well. In that case, you could use the current page as the main page or a splash page that one sees upon entry."


"I’m beginning to see why Haruhi thinks Koizumi is so useful, as loath as I am to admit it."


Kyon: "Thanks, I’ve got—"

Itsuki: "You could also learn animation and add a bit more flair to the site."

Kyon: "Nah, that’d take to long, and I just want to get this—"

Itsuki: "In fact, I think the site could be most improved by changing it completely. Why not make a “Mikuru Asahina: Maid Idol” fansite, for instance? And post those pictures?"

Kyon: "…"

Itsuki: "It’d certainly get more hits than the site is currently getting."

Kyon: "I’m never asking you for advice again."

Itsuki: "I’m joking, joking. My earlier suggestions were perfectly serious."


"I crumple the paper I was writing his suggestions on and throw it in the corner."


Itsuki: "...Very well."


"And so I spent the rest of lunch hour surfing the Internet out of sheer boredom. As a result, when it was time to go back to class, nothing had gotten done on the website."

"I’ll have to think up some excuse for the meeting today."

"As Koizumi and I left the clubroom, the last thing I saw was Nagato staring intently at the computer."

"…"

"*KSSSSSH*"



Totally None

"Well, let’s see. Do I have any ideas for improving the website?"

"Totally none at all!"

"Well, I guess that's settled."

"And so I spent the rest of lunch hour surfing the Internet out of sheer boredom. As a result, when it was time to go back to class, nothing had gotten done on the website."

"I’ll have to think up some excuse for the meeting today."

"As Koizumi and I left the clubroom, the last thing I saw was Nagato staring intently at the computer."

"…"

"*KSSSSSH*"

[Heatth]

"He always acts suspicious."


Nice change :heh:

But, you know that you just skiped on scene right? The "Late for Class?"

*e*
Oh, yeah, does anyeone have any idea for our website?

The main thame must be "crossroads", not genderbent. So I briefly thought about the initial page being like the SOSDan's, but doubled. Like the two pages overlaping each other. Cliking on 入り口/Enter you go to the real site.

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

Hm... for some reason, Yuki's dialogue in the original, as well as the edits, is bothering me. I can't quite place why, though...

[Jintor]

Late For Class


"I won?"

"At a thousand to one odds, I won?"

"Classroom 1-5’s atmosphere is always overwhelmingly oppressive. This is, of course, because it contains Haruhi Suzumiya."

"Not, however, today. Today, for one of the first times ever, I have arrived before her."

"This is excellent! What do I win?"

"...Nothing?"

"Depressed, I collapse into my chair and flop forward onto my desk. Such is the life of someone who cannot truly win at anything."

"There are those who are even less fortunate than I am, however."


???: "Kyon…"


"Go away, I’m trying to catch a few minutes of shuteye before class."

"Whoever it is has started to shake me. I suppose I must wake up."


Kunikida: "Kyon, I need your help."


"It’s Kunikida, who looks uncharacteristically nervous."


Kyon: "…Help with what?"

Kunikida: "Ahaha. Since you’re in Suzumiya-san’s weird club, you probably know a lot of great and mysterious hiding places, right?"

Kyon: "…Not really."

Kunikida: "Uh… Well, at least let me hide under your desk today, okay?"

Kyon: "...What’s up with you today?"

Kunikida: "Well, uh, see, it’s kinda-"


"At that moment, the classroom door slammed open. There is, of course, only one person who would do this:"

"…Taniguchi?"


Taniguchi: "Mornin’, Kyon. Hey, Kunikida!"


"He says, pointing a finger directly in an exasperated-looking Kunikida’s face."


Taniguchi: "Remember what we discussed over the phone last night?"

Kunikida: "...Yes. I remember. We talked for six hours. How could I not remember?"


"What’s going on? I’m confused."


Kunikida: "Taniguchi got it in his mind that—"

Taniguchi: "Today we’re going to find girlfriends!"

Kunikida: "Could you maybe not announce it like it’s already decided?"


"It emerged that after his apparent heartbreak yesterday, Taniguchi decided he was tired of being single, so he somehow roped Kunikida into his plan to spend the next two weeks trolling for women across town. I wish them both luck."


Kunikida: "Hey, don’t you say it like it’s already decided too!"

Taniguchi: "I don’t see why you’re so against this. You’re getting a girlfriend out of it, man!"

Kunikida: "Well, let’s see. There’s no guarantee we’ll actually be able to pick up girls, being with you would reduce my chances even further, and it’s eating up my time after school. I mean, it’d be great if I could get a girlfriend, but…"

Taniguchi: "Yeah! So that’s why we’re gonna do it!"

Kunikida: "Please don’t just decide things for me."

Taniguchi: "Wanna rock-paper-scissors over it?"

Kunikida: "…Alright, I’ll go."


"I wish them both luck."


Taniguchi: "Aw, come on, buddy, don’t be like that. You can come too! Women feel more at ease when it’s a group of guys."

Kunikida: "Yeah, Kyon, come with us. At least with you around we might have a fighting chance…"

Kyon: "Sorry, but I must decline. I have club activities every day, after all, so I can’t come with you."


"This is one of the few times I am truly glad to be a part of the SOS Brigade."

"The last few minutes before homeroom were spent with Taniguchi mumbling about something or other and Kunikida glaring at me like I betrayed him. And, as the bell rang, Haruhi quickly slid open the door and into her seat."


"I turned around at my seat and grinned at her."


Kyon: "Haruhi."

Haruhi: "What?"

Kyon: "You’re late."


"The fleeting glimpse of the look on her face is worth the bruise I sustain to my shoulder tenfold."

[Heatth]

Hm... for some reason, Yuki's dialogue in the original, as well as the edits, is bothering me. I can't quite place why, though...

I thik it is just because don't sounds like her :p

She usually speaks only in smal senteces, T think, so "Please let me use the computer. I have an idea." sound strange.

Jintor tryed to fix it by using complicated words. However, she only speek like that when explaining something.

I think SlaveMonkey idea is better: she stares until Kyons notice and ask her, before speak anything.

*e* Jintor, you are not bolding the changes anymore? :/

I don't think it need to emphasize the "late" of "You are late". The situation is what isimportant, not that word.

[CanadaAotS]

I just finished reading the "Haruki-sama's Back to School Brigade Meeting EXTRAORDINARY" scene. Probably my favourite so far, hahahaha.

Haruki: "FOOL! My legend began in the twelth century." Haruki is Excalibur, prove me wrong.

I like how Mitsuuru actually puts up a fight when Haruki pulls out the maid uniform out of nowhere. Although "I'll sue you for sexual harassment! I can you know!" is probably the least effective argument he could've used to stop Haruki... lol.

And the gratuitous English EXTRAORDINARY is awesome. Greatest scene title ever.

[Jintor]

I bold when I feel like it. Or rather, when I remember.

Think about the way Kyon would speak that line.

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

I thik it is just because don't sounds like her :p

She usually speaks only in smal senteces, T think, so "Please let me use the computer. I have an idea." sound strange.

Jintor tryed to fix it by using complicated words. However, she only speek like that when explaining something.

Even her simple statement of "no" seems off, though. Maybe I'm just imagining things.

[Jintor]

She's a non-verbal character. More shaking of the head, I think.

[Heatth]

Even her simple statement of "no" seems off, though. Maybe I'm just imagining things.

I don't think so, because I feel the same way. Jintor edited it again. I think it is good now.

Nagato is a hard character.... It is Jintor who is writing her route right?


Think about the way Kyon would speak that line.

I have imagined different... But, well, if you say.

She's a non-verbal character. More shaking of the head, I think.

Agree. I think it is good now.



PS: I agree, "Haruki-sama's Back to School Brigade Meeting EXTRAORDINARY" is awesome. :p

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

Nagato is a hard character.... It is Jintor who is writing her route right?

Yes, and I do not envy him at all. I feel the Nagatos are at their best as supporting characters, not the central focus.

They're essentially the embodiments of the expression "Less is more," from their usual dialogue to even their actions, so focusing even somewhat on them runs a severe risk of making their portrayals seem off.

Though, if I keep this up, I'll be entering rant mode, so I think I'm just going to quit now. :heh:

[Heatth]

Yes, and I do not envy him at all. I feel the Nagatos are at their best as supporting characters, not the central focus.

They're essentially the embodiments of the expression "Less is more," from their usual dialogue to even their actions, so focusing even somewhat on them runs a severe risk of making their portrayals seem off.

Though, if I keep this up, I'll be entering rant mode, so I think I'm just going to quit now. :heh:

Disagree my favorites storys/books are the ones focusing Yuki. But, yeah, write her must be a pain. Good luck Jintor.

[ClockWorkAngel]

Definitely gunna be fun for you Jintor ;)

[Joe4evr]

This thread has not moved since I went to bed last night? We're losing production.

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

Disagree my favorites storys/books are the ones focusing Yuki. But, yeah, write her must be a pain. Good luck Jintor.

Let's see... stories focusing primarily on Nagato... hm... Disappearance, which focused on an alternate version of her... Charmed at First Sight LOVER, which was almost entirely forgettable(yes, I realize the irony here)... um... the Intrigues prologue?

This thread has not moved since I went to bed last night? We're losing production.

The last 24 hours were the most productive anyone has been in a while. :heh:

[Heatth]

Let's see... stories focusing primarily on Nagato... hm... Disappearance, which focused on an alternate version of her... Charmed at First Sight LOVER, which was almost entirely forgettable(yes, I realize the irony here)... um... the Intrigues prologue?


Yeah. Also the her story on editor chief. Charmed at First Sight LOVER is somewhat irrelevant, but I really like it. But I guess I just like all her appearences after the Disappearance :p.

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

I'll give you the Yuki story from Editor In Chief. I actually forgot about that one. :heh:

[Jintor]

I like writing Yuki. She's a fun challenge.

I really would hate to be writing Mikuru, I have no grasp on her at all.

Kyon obviously is my favourite (because there's a tonne going on in his head, despite his actions), and Haruhi's enthusiasm is fun. Itsuki and his mysterious-ness is great, also. Kunikuda is a ??? and Taniguchi is basically, well, the butt-monkey.

[vivify93]

Apparently, I could write for Kyon, Asahina, Nagato, and Koizumi, but not Suzumiya worth shit.

Anyhow, I shall be resolute in my guy-craziness and my GaKu Division leaderyness and my nyoro~n-ness.

So, for now,

"Minna-san, ganbatte kudasai!"

[Jintor]

Flux

"One of these days."

"One of these days I’ll lose my mind while climbing this hill. This huge, enormous hill."

"No, I refuse to stop complaining about it. I will complain as long as I want, thank you very much."

"Someone please get me the idiot who decided North High would be at the top of a hill. I’ll introduce him to Haruki, saying that his dream has always been to wear a French maid uniform. That’ll teach him."

"Heh heh, I can imagine it right now. The catharsis will be wonderful—oh, I’m already at the gates."

"...That was surprisingly fast."


???: "Kyon-chan!"


"And waiting for me there is, to my surprise, Asahina-senpai."


Kyonko: "Good morning!"

Mitsuuru: "I was waiting for you, Kyon-chan."


"Ah, I’m so happy. Not sure why, though."

"Asahina-senpai seems to have completely recovered from yesterday. I also notice that he has his school uniform back. Does he have spares?"


Mitsuuru: "Would you believe it? Suzumiya-san actually came by late last night and dropped off my uniform! He even apologized for taking it."

Kyonko: "You’re kidding."


"I just can’t see Haruki doing something that nice. He’s clearly planning something evil. Watch out, Asahina-senpai!"


Kyonko: "So, why exactly were you waiting for me?"

Mitsuuru: "I was just wondering. While you were with me in the clubroom, did you notice anything strange?"


"…Eh? Didn’t I hear something exactly like this last night?"

[Note: This following line is a flashback.]
Big Mitsuuru: "Listen to me- grgggh... v-very carefully, Kyon-chan. What exactly happened today? Anything out of the ordinary?"
[/flashback]

…This again.


Kyonko: "Not… really. Why? Did something happen?"

Mitsuuru: "…It’s classified, so it’s hard for me to explain, but… for fifteen minutes, there was a state of temporal flux in the clubroom. You and I were at the center of it."


"I didn’t notice anything at all. Am I that unobservant?"


Mitsuuru: "For that period of time, you and I effectively ceased to exist."

Kyonko: "Wait, hold on. Ceased to exist? That’s crazy, I remember exactly what happened in those fifteen minutes. We talked, right?"

Mitsuuru: "That’s exactly it. My superiors say we vanished completely, but I remember all of it…"

Kyonko: "…So, what’s really going on here?"

Mitsuuru: "…"

Kyonko: "…"

Mitsuuru: "...Um, want me to walk you as far as the first-year hallway?"

Kyonko: "...Good idea, thanks."


"Brrr. I felt that chill."

"What the hell is happening to me!?"

"And if that wasn’t enough, as I passed through the school entrance, I heard it again. Far above my head."

"A ripple."

Yeaaaaaaaaaah that didn't need much editing

[Kaisos Erranon]

I can't decide whether that means I'm getting better or whether you're getting lazier.

[Sho-tan]

Quite possibly a combination of both.

[Roger Rambo]

Random brain fart I spewed out after seeing this post by Dannycat (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2522671&postcount=4386), when I came up with the theoretical end result of such an altercation.


My escape from Haruki and Koizumi's sinister machinations was short lived.

In one smooth motion, Yuuki reached his long fingered hand behind his back and grasped my upper arm in it and with uncanny strength and swung my weight around his body to his front front, stopping my momentum by catching my other shoulder in his hand holding the novel he was reading. Giving a embarrassingly girlish squeak, I immediately tried to wiggle out of my would be protectors grasp and pry his hand away from my arm. While Yuuki's grip felt feather light compared Haruki's (and I've been man handled enough by that Gorilla to tell!), when it came to tearing it away I might as well have been trying to lift a car.

Koizumi and Haruki, completely taken back by this unexpected betrayal, had momentarily paused their advance. They honestly seemed completely surprised by Nagato's sudden action. The same could be said for me!

Turning my head and craning it upwards (why do I have to be so short?) I emphatically demanded to know what Nagato was doing. He was seemingly not paying attention to me, staring in Haruki's direction. I turned again to the object of his focus...the damned bunny girl corset...unfortunately Haruki had noticed Nagato's gaze as well. A devilish grin slowly crept over his face.

Oh for the love of...Nagato you can't really...

I turned back to Yuuki only to find myself interrupted by the gaze of Nagato's marble like eye's. His face was as usual expressionless but at the same time had this odd kind of intensity to it...He really WAS serious.

A hand came down and patted my shoulder twice, not hard but definitely not gentile. The hand was big. Haruki (what does it say that I can recognize a guy I'm not dating by the feel of his hands on me?). I turned from Nagato to the brigade chief. That toothy million dollar smile. Frankly it's offensive how good it looks on him.

"Well now Kyon. Your not going to turn Nagato down to, are you?"

You and Koizumi? In a heart beat. But Nagato? As outrageous as all this is, I don't feel like I can turn him down. I suppose this is the problem with reliable guys who always help you out in a jam. Hard to say no...Besides, it's just so unusual to see Yuuki get this...interested. Sometimes the alien boy just doesn't seem concerned in human matters in the slightest. But really Nagato, do you have to take lead from Haruki's cosplay fetish?

With a slight push, Yuuki handed me over to Koizumi, who eagerly took me in hand. I could have resisted, but it seemed at this point it would have just brought about even greater indignity. Haruki dragged Nagato and Mitsuru (who had spent the entire time quivering and sputtering) out of the room and locked the door behind them. Before it shut, I noticed Haruki giving Nagato a forced high five.

Koizumi undid my uniform ribbon...

--------------------
Koizumi fussed with the my bow tie cuff. I swatted her off and finished tying it myself. The black corset was as usual tight enough to irritate but not enough to be genuinely uncomfortable...and that's most definitely not because of any size issues on my part, I'm scrawny enough as is. It's more like Haruki picked it out specifically to be right on the edge...that guy is insufferable.

The heels weren't very pleasant either. And I didn't even get the satisfaction of feeling taller next to Koizumi, since she'd donned a pair as well with the waitress outfit she'd put on. It's not like you need to be any taller!

As to be expected, everyone came back in, Haruki self righteously congratulated himself and decided that we needed to take pictures. Don't think that just because I got pushed into this trashy get up that I'm gonna let you spread those pictures all over the internet! Mitsuru was typically beat red the second he came in and took every excuse to try to not look at us. Haruki could learn to emulate some of Mitsuru's modesty (well, not to much). As for Yuuki...

I suppose if you hadn't known him very long you'd assume that Yuuki was absolutely uninterested in the two dressed up girls in the room with him. But having been able to observe his behavior for quite awhile, I didn't feel this was the case. Could Yuuki's human side be growing to the point that he's started to notice girls? If that was the case I'd have personally rather he not do it under Haruki's influence. One pervert is already...yes Yuuki, Koizumi looks very nice as a waitress. I think one look will tell you that thank you very much!

[ryanasaurus0077]

Apparently, I could write for Kyon, Asahina, Nagato, and Koizumi, but not Suzumiya worth shit.

Don't mess with the S (and that's Suzumiya, not Superman, in this case)!

[scify]

Awesome. Not entirely sure I can picture Nagato doing that, but...

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

Yuki, probably not. Yuuki... well, let's just say I'm sure he'd love to probe Kyonko...

... Okay, that was bad. :heh:

[vivify93]

Yuki? Hate to offend one of the biggest Nagatoists I know, but I'm sure she'd love to jump Kyon.

But then again, so would half the cast...

[swtrooper42]

Yuki, probably not. Yuuki... well, let's just say I'm sure he'd love to probe Kyonko...
If you know what I mean.;)
Yuki? Hate to offend one of the biggest Nagatoists I know, but I'm sure she'd love to jump Kyon.
As would most of the fans.

I find the mental image of Yuki "jumping" Kyon to be most amusing. Especially in my version, which requires a running tackle.

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

Yuki? Hate to offend one of the biggest Nagatoists I know, but I'm sure she'd love to jump Kyon.

Well yeah... but would she actually act in a manner that would result in Kyon being forced into a costume? :p

[Ithekro]

Well, if Kyon gets into the costume because of Yuki, it is his own fault. The only way he'd know is if he asked her if she liked it. She's nod, maybe give a single word answer, probably stare at him or the costume before that so that he might think to ask. Then he'd probably do it. While he moes out to Mikuru, he seems weakest against Yuki. If he finds something she wants he will usually try to get it done.

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

Well, if Kyon gets into the costume because of Yuki, it is his own fault. The only way he'd know is if he asked her if she liked it. She's nod, maybe give a single word answer, probably stare at him or the costume before that so that he might think to ask. Then he'd probably do it. While he moes out to Mikuru, he seems weakest against Yuki. If he finds something she wants he will usually try to get it done.

The amusing thing is, their relationship works the other way, as well. Though, in Yuki's case, it's more due to the fact that damn near every girl in the story seems to want to get into Kyon's pants...

[CanadaAotS]

I Will Have My Revenge Too

"Before I was forcibly inducted into the SOS Brigade, I never quite appreciated how enjoyable it is to just walk around at your own pace."

"Of course, walking around the halls of this school, for some reason, carries with it its own risks."


Boy: "The time... has come."


In one of the hallways that connects to the Old Shack, I ran into a student gazing out over the courtyard below, muttering ominously to himself.


Boy: "Soon... very soon, I shall once again be the master of that computer! Soon, soon..."


"He seems familiar."

"...Ah, right, this is the president of the Computer Research Society. I've known him, or perhaps that's known of him, almost as long as I've been in the SOS Brigade. We don't really talk much, though, thanks to certain events entirely of Haruhi's making."


CSP: "Yes, Soon, yes, that stupid bitch and her cronies will get what's coming to them... yes, yes, ahahahahaha!"


"The reason for that should be obvious, and I'd tell you if I weren't still mortally embarrassed by it, but... simply put, it involved: his hand, Mikuru's chest, and a camera. Oh, and their prized computer."

"By the way, he used to be more normal than this. He's a stunning example of why you don't involved with Haruhi."


CSP: "With what is written on this piece of paper I hold in my hand right at this very moment, I, the Computer Society President, shall unhinge that horrid club from its... horrid... clubroom."

Kyon: "You know, in my experience, Haruhi shows up whenever someone says bad things about the SOS Brigade."

CSP: "Gah!!!! Yoooooouuuuuuuu!"


"He instantly crumples the piece of paper he was holding and throws it out the window, then looks around innocently."

"Uh. No, he was never like this at all."


Kyon: "...Did something bad happen recently?"

CSP: "Yes. Why do you ask? I'll tell you about it if you want to listen."

Kyon: "Uh, no thanks. In fact, I'm kind of busy, later."

CSP: "That's fine, fine. I, too, am busy. Um, later, that is. ...I'm also busy now."


"Busy with a psychiatric appointment, I hope."


CSP: "I, um, have to go get my piece of paper."


"Or not."

"When I finally got to the clubroom, Haruhi was there waiting for me."


Haruhi: "Yyyyyyyyyyyyyyouuuuuuuuuuuu'reeeeeeee late!"


"That's the second time I've heard that today from you. Nice job with that extended 'you're', by the way. Makes me feel appreciated."


Haruhi: "Whatever, here, look at this. It hit me on the head as I was walking through the courtyard."


"...It's a crumpled piece of paper that reads, in feverish writing, 'IMPORTANT! EXPOSE ILLEGAL CLUBROOM OCCUPATION TO AUTHORITIES! FOR GLORY!'"


Haruhi: "Any idea what this means?"

Kyon: "...Nope, none at all."


"Normal days don't last very long when you're a member of the SOS Brigade."


I don't know why, but the "FOR GLORY!" made me laugh for a good while. Still trying to catch up... I'll probably have a checklist for Day One done pretty soon.

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

GLORY TO THE COMPUTER CLUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUB! :heh:

[CrowKenobi]

The amusing thing is, their relationship works the other way, as well. Though, in Yuki's case, it's more due to the fact that damn near every girl in the story seems to want to get into Kyon's pants...Too bad that Kyon is too dense to realize it... :heh:

Or, if provided the opportunity, his sense of chivalry would stop him... :D

or whatever stopped him from "kissing" Mikuru in "Bamboo Leaf Rhapsody..." :naughty:

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

The thing that's stopping Kyon from doing whatever he wants with Mikuru and Yuki is... Haruhi.

Well, that's what's stopping him from doing anything with Mikuru, at any rate. :heh:

[CanadaAotS]

Incoming Mass Wall of Text.


September the Second, Day One

Note: The timeline for this day cuts between the universes. I decided to go through the scenes chronologically, according to the Flowchart rather then seperate them by universe.

Morning- Breakfast with the Little Brother
Background: Kyon's Room
Sprites: Otouto
Appears on his first line “Hey! Time to get up!”
Event CG: MORNING WAKE-UP ATTACK!
Otouto in mid air just before he lands a MORNING WAKE-UP ATTACK! To Kyonko's back. Kyonko on her bed, still laying stomach-down but with her head turned towards her inevitable doom, a look of horror on her face. Poor Kyonko ;_;
Background: Kyon's Kitchen
Appears on the line “I forcibly ejected my little brother...”
Sprites: Otouto
Appears on his first line in the kitchen “Hey, Kyon-chan”
End of Morning- Breakfast with the Little Brother

To School- Summer Heat
Background: On the Way to School
You know the scene where Asakura talks to Kyon for a few seconds on the way to school? Where he's trudging up a hill? That's what this background is.
Sprites: Itsuko
Appears on Kyonko's narrative “Itsuko?”
Itsuko's sprite expression is important for this scene. Can't be her usual fox-grin.
Hint of a Real Smile (Call out to her)
Continuation of To School- Summer Heat
Ridiculous
Continuation of To School- Summer Heat
Itsuko's sprite leaves the screen on the last line of the scene “And so, I climbed the hill to school alone.”
End of To School- Summer Heat

Lunchtime- The Heart of a Maiden is Fragile
Background: Kyon's Classroom
Sprites: Kunikida (female), Taniguchi (female)
Kunikida and Taniguchi appear on their first lines “Kunikida: So you're really into this guy, huh?” “Taniguchi: Yes! I've been Stalk-- follo-- uh, running into him...”.
The Heart of a Maiden, Extended Dialogue (This person sounds familiar)
Continuation of Lunchtime- The Heart of a Maiden is Fragile.
Else
Continuation of Lunchtime- The Heart of a Maiden is Fragile.
End of Lunchtime- The Heart of a Maiden is Fragile

Classroom- Personal Space
Background: Kyon's Classroom
Sprites: Haruki
Appears on his first line “Kyon! Meeting in the clubroom!”
Disappears on the line “He dashes off with all the grace...”
What the Acronym Stands For (I may as well get there before him...)
Continuation of Classroom- Personal Space
I Will Have My Revenge! (Nuts to Haruki, I'll take my time)
Continuation of Classroom- Personal Space
Background: Corridor
Same background as the one used in the scene where Kyon is trying to find Mikuru's classroom. Appears on the line “I decided to go the long way around...”
Sprites: Computer Society President (CSP) (female)
Appears on her first line “Short Girl: *grumble*”
... URUSAI URUSAI URUSAI. It's related, trust me.
End of Classroom- Personal Space

Clubroom- Haruki-sama's Back to School Brigade Meeting EXTRAORDINARY
Background: Clubroom
Sprites: Itsuko, Haruki, Mitsuuru, Itsuko
Itsuko's sprite appears when Kyonko refers to her “...I whispered under my breath to Itsuko...”
Haruki's sprite appears at his first line “No talking before the start of your Leader's...”
Mitsuuru's sprite appears at his first line “A speech?”
End of Clubroom- Haruki-sama's Back to School Brigade Meeting EXTRAORDINARY

Clubroom- Request- Pime TaradoxTime Paradox
Background: Clubroom
Sprites: Mitsuuru
Appears at the line “Well, except for the exhausted-looking French Maid...”
Obviously his sprite will be a delicious trapwearing a French Maid outfit.
Special Effects: Green text
Oh hey, green text is back. Time for a universe flip.
*KSSSSSSHHH* CG/Transition/Whatever
End of Clubroom- Request- Time Paradox

To School- Why, Naze?
Background: On the Way to School
Sprites: Itsuki
Appears at “Kyon: ...Koizumi?”
End To School- Why, Naze?

Classroom- Back to Normal
Background: Kyon's Classroom
Sprites: Haruhi
Appears at the start of the scene
Still, Normality (Just say “Yo”)
Continuation of Back to Normal.
IF DebtSlave == True
Continuation of Still, Normality
Abnormality (Make a serious reply)
Continuation of Back to Normal
IF DebtSlave == True (Ate Haruhi's Lunch)
Continuation of Abnormality
End of Classroom- Back to Normal

Clubroom- The Falling Satellite
IF DebtSlave == False
Background: Classroom
Scene cut to the Clubroom after “I really didn't want to here it either...”
IF DebtSlave == True
Background: Cafeteria
Your average Japanese highschool cafeteria. Doubt this will be used often, but a background is needed for this scene...
Sprites: Haruhi
Appears with scene
Scene cut to the Clubroom at “As always, Nagato is sitting and reading...”
Background: Clubroom
Sprites: Yuki
Not Unique the Second Time (You're rereading 'The Fall of Hyperion')
Continuation of The Falling Satellite
The Boredom of Yuki Nagato (Go back to the Computer)
Continuation of The Falling Satellite
End of Clubroom- The Falling Satellite

Classroom- Guillotine
Background: Kyon's Classroom
Sprites: Haruhi
Appears for a single line, “Haruhi: Go straight to the clubroom, or heads will roll!”
The Slave of Suzumiya (Go straight there)
Continuation of Guillotine.
No Promotion for You (Walk around a bit first)
Continuation of Guillotine.
End of Classroom- Guillotine

Hallway- I Will Have My Revenge Too
Background: Corridor
Sprites: CSP (male)
Appears at “Boy: The time... has come.”
Disappears at “Or not.”
Background: Clubroom
Scene cuts at “When I finally got to the clubroom, Haruhi was there waiting for me.”
Sprite: Haruhi
End of Hallway- I Will Have My Revenge Too

Clubroom- Request (Universe 1)
Background: Clubroom
Sprites: Mikuru
Appears at “I was about to leave myself, when I noticed Asahina-san...”
Nice dripping water there. Not symbolic at all, nope. Huhuhu. After that line, scene cut to Corridor.
Background: Corridor
Sprites: Mikuru
Tact? (You'll be DEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAD)
Continuation of Request.
Special Effect: Green Text
Fuck yeah, green text, you're the best Special Effect EVER!
*KSSSSSSHHH* CG/Transition/Whatever
Gratitude (You'll still be around)
Continuation of Request.
Special Effect: Green Text
*KSSSSSSHHH* CG/Transition/Whatever
End of Clubroom- Request (Universe 1)

Clubroom- Open and Close
Background: Clubroom
Sprites: Mitsuuru
Oh shi- Universes are dividing by zero. By the way, how do you pluralize universe? Universi? :P
End of Clubroom- Open and Close

Evening On the Way Home- Paradox, Redux
Background: On the Way Home (Late Afternoon/Evening)
Background: On the Way Home (Night)
Appears at “And so this is why I'm heading to the supermarket...”
Sprites: Big Mitsuuru
Appears at “Man: Uggh...”
Technobabble [I] (What happened to you?)
Continuation of Paradox, Redux.
Apologies (I didn't notice anything)
Continuation of Pardox, Redux.
End of Evening On the Way Home- Paradox, Redux

Interlude 2: A Room- It's Too Dark in Here
Event CG: Dark People in a Dark Room
End of Interlude 2: A Room- It's Too Dark in Here

Artist Checklist for September the Second, Day One Art Checklist
Event CG (1):
MORNING WAKEUP ATTACK!
Backgrounds (1):
On the Way to School
Sprites (4):
CSP (female)
CPS (male)
Mitsuuru (French Maid) (delicious trap)
Mitsuuru (Frog Suit) (lol)

Everything else has already been used once in the VN.

End of September the Second, Day One


I think I got a little bored while writing this up... please disregard anything with a strike-through. lol.

[ClockWorkAngel]

My god, this will take some time...

[Aebliss]

We should have an "FX OFF" option in the config menu. More options are always good.

Late For Class


I won?

At a thousand to one odds, I won?

Classroom 1-5’s atmosphere is always overwhelmingly oppressive. This is, of course, because it contains Haruhi Suzumiya.

Not, however, today. Today, for one of the first times ever, I have arrived before her.

This is excellent! What do I win?

Nothing?

Depressed, I collapse into my chair and flop forward onto my desk. Such is the life of someone who cannot truly win at anything.

There are those who are even less fortunate than I am, however.


???: Kyon…


Go away, I’m trying to catch a few minutes of shuteye before class.

He’s started to shake me. I suppose I must wake up.


Kunikida: Kyon, I need your help.


It’s Kunikida, who looks uncharacteristically nervous.


Kyon: …Help with what?

Kunikida: Ahaha. Since you’re in Suzumiya-san’s weird club, you probably know a lot of great and mysterious hiding places, right?

Kyon: …Not really.

Kunikida: Uh… Well, at least let me hide under your desk today, okay?

Kyon: What’s up with you today?

Kunikida: Well, uh, see, it’s kinda…


At that moment, the classroom door slammed open. There is, of course, only one person who would do this:

…Taniguchi!?


Taniguchi: Mornin’, Kyon. Hey, Kunikida!


He says, pointing a finger directly in an exasperated-looking Kunikida’s face.


Taniguchi: Remember what we discussed over the phone last night?

Kunikida: Yes. I remember. We talked for six hours. How could I not remember?


What’s going on? I’m confused.


Kunikida: Taniguchi got it in his mind that—

Taniguchi: Today we’re going to find girlfriends!

Kunikida: Could you maybe not announce it like it’s already decided?


It emerged that after his apparent heartbreak yesterday, Taniguchi decided he was tired of being single, so he somehow roped Kunikida into his plan to spend the next two weeks trolling for women across town. I wish them both luck.


Kunikida: Hey, don’t you say it like it’s already decided too!

Taniguchi: I don’t see why you’re so against this. You’re getting a girlfriend out of it, man!

Kunikida: Well, let’s see. There’s no guarantee we’ll actually be able to pick up girls, being with you would reduce my chances even further, and it’s eating up my time after school. I mean, it’d be great if I could get a girlfriend, but…

Taniguchi: Yeah! So that’s why we’re gonna do it!

Kunikida: Please don’t just decide things for me.

Taniguchi: Wanna rock-paper-scissors over it?

Kunikida: …Alright, I’ll go.


I wish them both luck.


Taniguchi: Aw, come on, buddy, don’t be like that. You can come too! Women feel more at ease when it’s a group of guys.

Kunikida: Yeah, Kyon, come with us. At least with you around we might have a fighting chance…

Kyon: Sorry, but I must decline. I have club activities every day, after all, so I can’t come with you.


This is one of the few times I am truly glad to be a part of the SOS Brigade.

The last few minutes before homeroom were spent with Taniguchi mumbling about something or other and Kunikida glaring at me like I betrayed him. And, as the bell rang, Haruhi quickly slid open the door and into her seat.


I turned around at my seat and grinned at her.


Kyon: Haruhi.

Haruhi: What?

Kyon: You’re late.


The look on her face tells me she that she'd like to hit me for that.


Bleh, I don't like how I did this one. Writing Kunikida is always difficult.

The rock-paper-scissors thing is a reference to this fanfic (http://www.baka-tsuki.org/forums/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=379), which is one of the best I've ever seen, if anyone was wondering.

*snrk* Priceless. :D Kunikida seems a lot less self-assured than usual, though. Taniguchi, Taniguchi ... Sheesh. 'Women feel more comfortable if it's a group of gus'? That's a new one by me. I thought women felt more comfortable if they outnumbered the men. Kyon being able to tell Haruhi she's late is gold. ^^

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

He doesn't get to very often... and it never really works out in his favor, anyway. :heh:

[Aebliss]

All of them? >_>

Flux

One of these days.

One of these days I’ll lose my mind while climbing this hill. This huge, enormous hill.

No, I refuse to stop complaining about it. I will complain as long as I want, thank you very much.

Someone please get me the idiot who decided North High would be at the top of a hill. I’ll introduce him to Haruki, saying that his dream has always been to wear a French maid uniform. That’ll teach him.

Heh heh, I can imagine it right now. The catharsis will be wonderful—oh, I’m already at the gates. That was surprisingly fast.


???: Kyon-chan!


And waiting for me there is, to my surprise, Asahina-senpai.


Kyonko: Good morning!

Mitsuuru: I was waiting for you, Kyon-chan.


Ah, I’m so happy. Not sure why, though.

Asahina-senpai seems to have completely recovered from yesterday. I also notice that he has his school uniform back. Does he have spares?


Mitsuuru: Would you believe it? Suzumiya-san actually came by late last night and dropped off my uniform! He even apologized for taking it.

Kyonko: You’re kidding.


I just can’t see Haruki doing something that nice. He’s clearly planning something evil. Watch out, Asahina-senpai!


Kyonko: So, why exactly were you waiting for me?

Mitsuuru: I was just wondering. While you were with me in the clubroom, did you notice anything strange?


…Eh? Didn’t I hear something exactly like this last night?

[Note: This following line is a flashback.]
Big Mitsuuru: Listen to me very carefully, Kyon-chan. What exactly happened today? Anything out of the ordinary?


…This again.


Kyonko: Not… really. Why? Did something happen?

Mitsuuru: …It’s classified, so it’s hard for me to explain, but… for fifteen minutes, there was a state of temporal flux in the clubroom. You and I were at the center of it.


I didn’t notice anything at all. Am I that unobservant?


Mitsuuru: For that period of time, you and I effectively ceased to exist.

Kyonko: Wait, hold on. Ceased to exist? That’s crazy, I remember exactly what happened in those fifteen minutes. We talked, right?

Mitsuuru: That’s exactly it. My superiors say we vanished completely, but I remember all of it…

Kyonko: …So, what’s really going on here?

Mitsuuru: …

Kyonko: …

Mitsuuru: Um, want me to walk you as far as the first-year hallway?

Kyonko: Good idea, thanks.


Brrr. I felt that chill.

What the hell is happening to me!?

And if that wasn’t enough, as I passed through the school entrance, I heard it again. Far above my head.

A ripple.


I did better here, I think.

I think.

You did very well. Nicely ominous! ^^ Please keep up the good work.

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I think I can safely say that this was the most awkward limo ride of my young life. The fact that it was, so far, the first and only limo ride of my life does not invalidate my claim.

I sat on a nicely upholstered car seat, with my three 'abductors' opposite me. At first, that sneering bitch wanted to sit next to me, but Tachibana muttered something and pulled her over. The three of you should look more uncomfortable, squeezed together like that.

Of course Suou isn't even sweating. That flawed interface does not seem to be subject to the ambient temperature. But what's up with Tachibana and that vile time-traveller not sweating a drop? It's stuffy in here, isn't anyone going to crack a window?

"Do forgive me," Tachibana said, the very image of courtesy, and indicated a mini-bar. How extravagant are you people planning to be? "Would you like a soda," Tachibana said, smilingly ignoring my consternation, "some iced coffee, chilled tea, or perhaps some spring water? Or perhaps you'd prefer a beer ...?"

I'm still a minor, please don't offer me booze. Especially don't offer me booze when I'm alone in a car with three suspicious people, two of whom I know to be capable of kidnapping their opponents. The longer I'm in this car, the dumber I feel for going along with this.

“I’m sorry, I’m sorry,” Tachibana said, laughing at me. “See? There are no alcoholic beverages in the refrigerator. The Organization which watches over Sasaki-san is mindful of the rules and regulations which govern young ladies of your own age.”

Just who do you think you’re talking to?

Fujiwara chose this moment to grumble something under her breath, and turned her head away from me to look out the window. Looks like you’re just posing to me. I mean, this car has tinted windows, you can’t see anything but shadows through them, really. Did you want a beer, and are you annoyed because my presence denies you the chance to have one?

The limousine, which I must admit was a very smooth ride, stopped with the gentlest of shocks.

“Ah, we have arrived,” Tachibana commented needlessly. “Please allow me, ojou-sama.”

Smiling that unnecessary and unwanted smile, he reached past me to open the door and gestured I should be the first one to exit. I was happy enough to do so, even if the air outside wasn’t much cooler than inside. The eerie trio exited right behind me, and Fujiwara made a point of standing too close. She must think I’d run away as soon as I got the chance. The thought did occur to me, I must admit.

The ‘cake shop’, which Tachibana had requested I accompany him to, looked like a nice little family restaurant. There was a sign over the door in English. ‘Mom and pop’? A discrete line of Japanese underneath read: ‘savoury and sweet confections for all tastes’. So far, so good.

What was not good, was that there was a sudden motion behind me, and I felt first a chill motion of air, and then a familiar heavy, tickling sensation against the back of my neck.

“Hey-!” I protested, whirling around.

Fujiwara took a step back, smirking triumphantly and holding my replacement hair ribbon. She tossed it up, and Suou reached out and plucked it out of the air without even looking at it. My ribbon disappeared into his uniform jacket’s pocket, and Tachibana quickly interposed himself between the alien interface and myself.

“Please don’t be upset, please don’t be upset!” he pleaded, waving his hands in soothing gestures.

Are you trying to lower in rage points or something? Give me back my ribbon!

“There is a reason why this was done,” Tachibana assured me. “And we will tell you, I promise most sincerely. For now, shall we enter?”

What is wrong with these people? Apart from the obvious, of course …

As it turned out, more was wrong with them than I had realized. Upon entering the cake shop, I found it was empty apart from the staff. Did these guys rent the whole shop, or is this place always this dead?

A young woman in a maid outfit greeted us with an expressionless face and a bow, and guided us to a booth. I found myself sitting opposite Tachibana and Fujiwara, with the uncomfortable non-presence of Suou at my side. At least they didn’t try to make me sit next to the window, so I’d be trapped … The young lady brought us four menus and stood waiting for us to order.

“Well, this all looks delicious,” Tachibana said after scanning the menu, his smile dimpling his cheeks. “Do you have a preference?”

“Just water, please,” I muttered. Extravagance all around … I could afford some of those cakes, no problem. But if I did buy some, I wouldn’t have enough allowance left for the rest of the month. I have to keep in mind that I’m likely to have to pay for the SOS-Brigade, after all …

“Four orders of the cherry cream apple pie and four cups of jasmine tea, please,” Tachibana said, smiling at the waitress. He smilingly waved away my protest. “My treat, to apologize for the inconveniences you have been subjected to. Please; you must allow me to be a gentleman and make up for my mistakes.”

What kind of gentleman pulls stuff like this?

The lady went away, and returned shortly thereafter with a pot of tea and four cups on a tray. She’d found a friend somewhere, who was carrying a whole pie on a tray. The thing was slathered in cream, in which bright red cherries floated like warning buoys. Both trays were deposited on our table, after which they went and got us some plates and cutlery to go with it. I had to admit it all smelled good …

“Thank you, that will be excellent,” Tachibana complimented the expressionless ladies. “You may retire.”

They left without comment. Hey, they’re at least five years older than any of the people at this table who weren’t artificially created by an alien species! Is it really okay for you to order them around like that?

Tachibana only smiled, and started pouring tea and cutting slices of pie. Fujiwara sipped from her cup without commenting, while Suou regarded his foodstuffs as if they were an intriguing puzzle.

“Well then,” Tachibana said after he’d taken a bite. “I am sure you would like us to get to the point. But let me first ask: were you injured at all during the events on Setsubun? I understand considerable violence was unleashed.”

“No,” I replied curtly. “I’m fine.”

“I am relieved,” Tachibana said, his dimples deepening. “If you had been injured, I was of a mind to coerce Fujiwara-san to provide us with healing technology from the future.”

He chuckled at this, though Fujiwara gave a sharp sniff and turned her head to look out the window.

“You were, however, robbed,” Tachibana went on. “Your hair ribbon,” he clarified when I looked blank.

“I can buy another one,” I replied in a level tone of voice. “Unless you keep stealing them all, it’s not a problem.” I looked sideways at Suou, who said nothing and kept staring at his food.

“I am sure you are familiar with the legend of Makuro and Mashiro, however,” Tachibana said as he turned his teacup around and around, almost as if he were preparing for a tea ceremony.

Wait a minute, how are you familiar with it? Wasn’t that book supposed to be rare, or something?

“Well,” Tachibana said apologetically, “the Organization I belong to does keep a close eye on the cohorts of Koizumi Itsuko. Especially in … exciting times like these. The recent events at North High have attracted a lot of attention from various people.”

I felt a cold chill run down my back as I remembered the silent interfaces gathering in the shadows, the night when I was bringing Makuro her beans. Who else had been watching, that I didn’t even know existed?

“The events on Setsubun have caused a lot of concern,” Tachibana went on as if reading my thoughts, “with a lot of groups even beyond the ones represented in this room. Many people fear that the creatures which were created by Suzumiya Haruki add a chaotic element to an already unstable situation. Frankly, Suzumiya Haruki is chaotic enough.”

I couldn’t really argue with that, but still. So you guys think Haruki created the Oni as well?

“Opinions are somewhat divided,” Tachibana admitted after a sharp sniff from Fujiwara, who continued to look out the window while sipping her tea. “Still, what other logical conclusion could be drawn? Suzumiya Haruki unjustly wields the power of the divine, and no one in the Group which watches over Sasaki-san had ever encountered such creatures before outside of storybooks and ancient mythology.”

Fujiwara sniffed again. Suou refrained from comment, and just continued to look at his plate – which was empty now? When did he start eating? I never even heard him pick up his cutlery!

“You yourself have observed that these creatures are highly dangerous, have you not?” Tachibana asked, his smile fading into a serious, earnest expression.

As my little brother would say: “Well, duh.”

“I can see in your expression that you agree with me on this much,” Tachibana went on. “So please, will you not reconsider? With your help, we could snatch away the very existence of these dangerous and hostile creatures, so they will never again be able to harm you.”

“What are you talking about?” I heard myself ask.

“These dangerous creatures are spawned by Suzumiya Haruki’s abuse of the divine power!” Tachibana said, reaching across the table to seize my hands. “If the power is removed from Suzumiya-san, then the very thing that grants the creatures life vanishes. If you, princess, will commit yourself to your true knight–“

“No.”

Really, what else was I going to say? Why would anyone be surprised? There have always been dangers connected to associating with Haruki, why would this latest wrinkle make me change my mind?

Tachibana’s face twitched at my blunt refusal, but he just heaved a gentle sigh and let go of my hands. Fujiwara snorted contemptuously: “I told you that this series of events was determined, but you would not listen. All you have managed to do is embarrass yourself in front of … this.”

This what, you sneering bitch?

“You were right, Fujiwara-san,” Tachibana agreed with a slightly pained smile. “Very well. In that case, we move on to plan B. If you would be so kind …?”

Fujiwara set down her cup and turned to look at me, a contemptuous smirk on her lips.

“You lost your ribbon to that … thing, did you not?” she asked, her tone of voice betraying a sense of vast superiority. “The token which, according to the stories, allows the Oni to assume a human’s shape.”

We covered this, thank you.

“There is another use for such things,” Fujiwara went on. “You know of one book which details the two beings you have encountered. There is at least one more such. Of course you would not know about it, since it is, in this current temporal frame, a lost item. Lying behind a cabinet in some library somewhere. It will be rediscovered in the future – and kept hidden from Asahina Mitsuuru’s masters.”

I blinked, but didn’t say anything. I wasn’t that surprised that the time travelling factions were fighting a shadow war of information, but the fact that I was being given all of this information so freely did puzzle me just a bit.

“It is the personal diary of the con artist who tricked the creature called Makuro into effectively becoming the guardian of the hill on which your school stands,” Fujiwara continued. “He was a thief and a trickster, but rather knowledgeable. He writes that such tokens can also be used as reverse tracking beacons. As long as the creature has a person’s token, she can find that creature anywhere, regardless of distance in space and time.”

So far, this did not surprise me too much.

“And attack them,” Fujiwara concluded, “at her leisure. No matter where you run and hide, no matter how you try to protect yourself, she will find you and extract her due.” She smiled venomously sweetly at this.

A faint whine of sound came from Suou. We all turned to look at him; he was still staring at his plate, but words trickled from his mouth like incidental grains of rice: “Queen’s knight, knight’s queen. Knight’s princess, princess’s knight.”

Silence. For just a moment, Tachibana and Fujiwara looked as confused as I felt, but then Fujiwara’s mask like sneer snapped back into place. She grinned at me.

“There is no knight who is going to protect you from the wrath of the Oni if you do not give her what is required,” she said, sounding for all the world as if she were taunting me. “And you do not even know what it is you need to give her. This is most amusing to me.”

“Fujiwara-san …” Tachibana said, his smile looking even more pained. Lightly, he placed a hand on Fujiwara’s; she frowned darkly and snatched her hand away. “Please. We agreed on this.”

“Agreement is irrelevant,” Fujiwara countered. “This is predetermined, though I might wish it otherwise. I have my orders, and you serve to facilitate them in this case. This, also, was predetermined.”

“Just as you say, Fujiwara-san,” Tachibana agreed, his smile growing a little warmer. “This series of events, this plan B, is inevitable. So shall we get on with it, with a minimum of antagonism? The sooner this is done with, the sooner …?”

Fujiwara huffed, clearly annoyed, but then continued: “My superiors have told me what it is that the con artist promised to the Oni Makuro, the details of the ritual that must be performed to placate her and send her back into her guarding sleep.”

Tachibana took over, his voice sounding excited, or perhaps anxious: “Fujiwara-san’s superiors have also told her that if a week passes without these ceremonies being performed, the creature will be absolved of all promises and agreements. She will likely devour you alive for the affront and destroy North High so as to scour her territory clean. If she allows the Oni Mashiro to walk free, I do not doubt that she will seek out and devour Suzumiya Haruki, power and all. This would be a very bad thing.”

He certainly looked queasy at the thought of Mashiro eating Haruki alive. I guess in his case, this is because he didn’t want ‘the power’ to be lost to Sasaki forever. In my case, I had a bad flashback to seeing Mashiro hold Haruki and shed his blood while she used his powers. ‘Queasy’ is just a word, it can not accurately describe the sensation of snakes writhing in my gut at that memory. And the snakes hatched a whole new nest at the thought of Mashiro walking free with all of Haruki’s power …

“We want you to take possession of the ritual text,” Tachibana concluded. Right on cue, another maid-looking woman appeared with a tray. A stack of printouts was lying thereon, neatly bound together.

Wow. This felt … weird, somehow.

“Why do I have to do this?” I asked, not reaching for the printouts just yet. “If you all know what you have to do, then –“

“You are the contractor,” Tachibana said in a regretful tone of voice. “Had you not made a separate deal with the Oni, had this only been … maintenance, a periodical payment for Makuro’s continuing to do her duty, then it could have been anyone. But now, it has to be you. If you are not the one to make the payment, you will be eaten alive. Please accept the ritual.”

Feeling both apprehensive and completely silly, I reached out and did just that. It was not that thick a stack, and yet it felt curiously heavy.

“Now,” Tachibana said, “there is one more thing. The artefact that the Oni Makuro has taken from you is … special, or so I am told.”

“My hair ribbon?” I asked, nonplussed.

“Consider the source,” Tachibana suggested tactfully.

What? I got my hair ribbon from the future Asahina-san, who … Told me his younger self would receive it from me at a later date. Oh.

“An item out of time,” Tachibana clarified, his smile slightly worried. “Yet another item of proof, if any were needed, of the way Suzumiya Haruki warps the world around him in irresponsible ways. We are uncertain how possessing such an artefact will affect the creature’s powers, so it might be well if you could retrieve it.”

“Just how do you suggest I do that?” I asked, already feeling suspicious.

“There will be an opportunity to do so as you perform the ritual,” Tachibana assured me. “A fair trade. You will give Makuro an item which is technically equivalent, but whose properties are known to us, and which can pose no further danger.”

“What kind of object would that be?” I asked.

Next to me, Suou stirred. He reached into his uniform jacket’s pocket and pulled out a clumsily-wrapped parcel, which he wordlessly placed on top of the printouts in my hands.

“An object out of place,” Tachibana replied after waiting for a moment to see whether Suou would say anything. “This is, perhaps, a mixture of philosophy and science. Since space and time are inextricably linked, an object which should not exist in this place can be considered to be equivalent to an object which should not exist in this time. The explanation is somewhat flawed, but I am assured that this item is created from elements which do not exist anywhere in our galaxy. The rareness, therefore, should make up for the differences.”

I opened the parcel and looked inside. Blinked. “You have got to be joking.”

“I am afraid not,” Tachibana replied. “Rather, I must ask you to start wearing it immediately, so it can be said to be yours when the exchange is made, or you will not be able to reclaim your artefact. Rather, you will most likely be punished for trying to cheat the Oni Makuro.”

“Why do I have to wear something like this?” I objected vehemently. “I’m going to look ridiculous!”

“On the contrary,” Tachibana smiled, that impish gleam returning to his eyes. “I am quite, quite certain it will look … cute.”

“Cute princess,” Suou muttered, dark eyes gazing at some distant horizon.

“And incidentally,” Tachibana concluded, “wearing this … item … is a requirement of the ritual. I would suggest you start reading it as soon as you get home, so you can make the necessary preparations. There are many requirements which must be met. Please allow the Organization to make a small contribution – we regret we can do no more than provide you with a hard copy of the ritual text provided to us by Fujiwara-san, and this small pittance.”

He put an envelope in my hands. Even without opening it, I could guess it was stuffed with money; it was that kind of envelope.

This was … Why do these things keep happening to me? As if I really need to ask. Haruki, I swear …!

“Would you like another cup of tea?” Tachibana asked politely.

Fujiwara was looking out the window again, but I could see the smirk on her face from here.

“This thing,” I said, putting down the text and envelope to hold up the thing Suou had burdened me with. “If it really comes from outside this galaxy, is it even safe to have around? Isn’t it radioactive or something?”

“Most certainly not!” Tachibana assured me. “The Organization I belong to has tested it thoroughly. It is perfectly safe to wear … and you must wear it.”

“I’m going to need more than one cup of tea,” I muttered rebelliously as I looked down at the item I was now turning round and round in my hands. It didn’t feel as if it were made out of plastic at all. The two tips felt more like rock, and the part that should be flexible was certainly that, yet it felt as if it were made out of metal.

“A beer after all, then?” Tachibana chuckled.


Opinions, please? I apologize for the hiatus, but all sorts of stuff happened. (Like a week of scorching heat, which sapped my writing energy …)

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I think I can safely say that this was the most awkward limo ride of my young life. The fact that it was, so far, the first and only limo ride of my life does not invalidate my claim.

I sat on a nicely upholstered car seat, with my three 'abductors' opposite me. At first, that sneering bitch wanted to sit next to me, but Tachibana muttered something and pulled her over. The three of you should look more uncomfortable, squeezed together like that.

Of course Suou isn't even sweating. That flawed interface does not seem to be subject to the ambient temperature. But what's up with Tachibana and that vile time-traveller not sweating a drop? It's stuffy in here, isn't anyone going to crack a window?

"Do forgive me," Tachibana said, the very image of courtesy, and indicated a mini-bar. How extravagant are you people planning to be? "Would you like a soda," Tachibana said, smilingly ignoring my consternation, "some iced coffee, chilled tea, or perhaps some spring water? Or perhaps you'd prefer a beer ...?"

I'm still a minor, please don't offer me booze. Especially don't offer me booze when I'm alone in a car with three suspicious people, two of whom I know to be capable of kidnapping their opponents. The longer I'm in this car, the dumber I feel for going along with this.

“I’m sorry, I’m sorry,” Tachibana said, laughing at me. “See? There are no alcoholic beverages in the refrigerator. The Organization which watches over Sasaki-san is mindful of the rules and regulations which govern young ladies of your own age.”

Just who do you think you’re talking to?

Fujiwara chose this moment to grumble something under her breath, and turned her head away from me to look out the window. Looks like you’re just posing to me. I mean, this car has tinted windows, you can’t see anything but shadows through them, really. Did you want a beer, and are you annoyed because my presence denies you the chance to have one?

The limousine, which I must admit was a very smooth ride, stopped with the gentlest of shocks.

“Ah, we have arrived,” Tachibana commented needlessly. “Please allow me, ojou-sama.”

Smiling that unnecessary and unwanted smile, he reached past me to open the door and gestured I should be the first one to exit. I was happy enough to do so, even if the air outside wasn’t much cooler than inside. The eerie trio exited right behind me, and Fujiwara made a point of standing too close. She must think I’d run away as soon as I got the chance. The thought did occur to me, I must admit.

The ‘cake shop’, which Tachibana had requested I accompany him to, looked like a nice little family restaurant. There was a sign over the door in English. ‘Mom and pop’? A discrete line of Japanese underneath read: ‘savoury and sweet confections for all tastes’. So far, so good.

What was not good, was that there was a sudden motion behind me, and I felt first a chill motion of air, and then a familiar heavy, tickling sensation against the back of my neck.

“Hey-!” I protested, whirling around.

Fujiwara took a step back, smirking triumphantly and holding my replacement hair ribbon. She tossed it up, and Suou reached out and plucked it out of the air without even looking at it. My ribbon disappeared into his uniform jacket’s pocket, and Tachibana quickly interposed himself between the alien interface and myself.

“Please don’t be upset, please don’t be upset!” he pleaded, waving his hands in soothing gestures.

Are you trying to lower in rage points or something? Give me back my ribbon!

“There is a reason why this was done,” Tachibana assured me. “And we will tell you, I promise most sincerely. For now, shall we enter?”

What is wrong with these people? Apart from the obvious, of course …

As it turned out, more was wrong with them than I had realized. Upon entering the cake shop, I found it was empty apart from the staff. Did these guys rent the whole shop, or is this place always this dead?

A young woman in a maid outfit greeted us with an expressionless face and a bow, and guided us to a booth. I found myself sitting opposite Tachibana and Fujiwara, with the uncomfortable non-presence of Suou at my side. At least they didn’t try to make me sit next to the window, so I’d be trapped … The young lady brought us four menus and stood waiting for us to order.

“Well, this all looks delicious,” Tachibana said after scanning the menu, his smile dimpling his cheeks. “Do you have a preference?”

“Just water, please,” I muttered. Extravagance all around … I could afford some of those cakes, no problem. But if I did buy some, I wouldn’t have enough allowance left for the rest of the month. I have to keep in mind that I’m likely to have to pay for the SOS-Brigade, after all …

“Four orders of the cherry cream apple pie and four cups of jasmine tea, please,” Tachibana said, smiling at the waitress. He smilingly waved away my protest. “My treat, to apologize for the inconveniences you have been subjected to. Please; you must allow me to be a gentleman and make up for my mistakes.”

What kind of gentleman pulls stuff like this?

The lady went away, and returned shortly thereafter with a pot of tea and four cups on a tray. She’d found a friend somewhere, who was carrying a whole pie on a tray. The thing was slathered in cream, in which bright red cherries floated like warning buoys. Both trays were deposited on our table, after which they went and got us some plates and cutlery to go with it. I had to admit it all smelled good …

“Thank you, that will be excellent,” Tachibana complimented the expressionless ladies. “You may retire.”

They left without comment. Hey, they’re at least five years older than any of the people at this table who weren’t artificially created by an alien species! Is it really okay for you to order them around like that?

Tachibana only smiled, and started pouring tea and cutting slices of pie. Fujiwara sipped from her cup without commenting, while Suou regarded his foodstuffs as if they were an intriguing puzzle.

“Well then,” Tachibana said after he’d taken a bite. “I am sure you would like us to get to the point. But let me first ask: were you injured at all during the events on Setsubun? I understand considerable violence was unleashed.”

“No,” I replied curtly. “I’m fine.”

“I am relieved,” Tachibana said, his dimples deepening. “If you had been injured, I was of a mind to coerce Fujiwara-san to provide us with healing technology from the future.”

He chuckled at this, though Fujiwara gave a sharp sniff and turned her head to look out the window.

“You were, however, robbed,” Tachibana went on. “Your hair ribbon,” he clarified when I looked blank.

“I can buy another one,” I replied in a level tone of voice. “Unless you keep stealing them all, it’s not a problem.” I looked sideways at Suou, who said nothing and kept staring at his food.

“I am sure you are familiar with the legend of Makuro and Mashiro, however,” Tachibana said as he turned his teacup around and around, almost as if he were preparing for a tea ceremony.

Wait a minute, how are you familiar with it? Wasn’t that book supposed to be rare, or something?

“Well,” Tachibana said apologetically, “the Organization I belong to does keep a close eye on the cohorts of Koizumi Itsuko. Especially in … exciting times like these. The recent events at North High have attracted a lot of attention from various people.”

I felt a cold chill run down my back as I remembered the silent interfaces gathering in the shadows, the night when I was bringing Makuro her beans. Who else had been watching, that I didn’t even know existed?

“The events on Setsubun have caused a lot of concern,” Tachibana went on as if reading my thoughts, “with a lot of groups even beyond the ones represented in this room. Many people fear that the creatures which were created by Suzumiya Haruki add a chaotic element to an already unstable situation. Frankly, Suzumiya Haruki is chaotic enough.”

I couldn’t really argue with that, but still. So you guys think Haruki created the Oni as well?

“Opinions are somewhat divided,” Tachibana admitted after a sharp sniff from Fujiwara, who continued to look out the window while sipping her tea. “Still, what other logical conclusion could be drawn? Suzumiya Haruki unjustly wields the power of the divine, and no one in the Group which watches over Sasaki-san had ever encountered such creatures before outside of storybooks and ancient mythology.”

Fujiwara sniffed again. Suou refrained from comment, and just continued to look at his plate – which was empty now? When did he start eating? I never even heard him pick up his cutlery!

“You yourself have observed that these creatures are highly dangerous, have you not?” Tachibana asked, his smile fading into a serious, earnest expression.

As my little brother would say: “Well, duh.”

“I can see in your expression that you agree with me on this much,” Tachibana went on. “So please, will you not reconsider? With your help, we could snatch away the very existence of these dangerous and hostile creatures, so they will never again be able to harm you.”

“What are you talking about?” I heard myself ask.

“These dangerous creatures are spawned by Suzumiya Haruki’s abuse of the divine power!” Tachibana said, reaching across the table to seize my hands. “If the power is removed from Suzumiya-san, then the very thing that grants the creatures life vanishes. If you, princess, will commit yourself to your true knight–“

“No.”

Really, what else was I going to say? Why would anyone be surprised? There have always been dangers connected to associating with Haruki, why would this latest wrinkle make me change my mind?

Tachibana’s face twitched at my blunt refusal, but he just heaved a gentle sigh and let go of my hands. Fujiwara snorted contemptuously: “I told you that this series of events was determined, but you would not listen. All you have managed to do is embarrass yourself in front of … this.”

This what, you sneering bitch?

“You were right, Fujiwara-san,” Tachibana agreed with a slightly pained smile. “Very well. In that case, we move on to plan B. If you would be so kind …?”

Fujiwara set down her cup and turned to look at me, a contemptuous smirk on her lips.

“You lost your ribbon to that … thing, did you not?” she asked, her tone of voice betraying a sense of vast superiority. “The token which, according to the stories, allows the Oni to assume a human’s shape.”

We covered this, thank you.

“There is another use for such things,” Fujiwara went on. “You know of one book which details the two beings you have encountered. There is at least one more such. Of course you would not know about it, since it is, in this current temporal frame, a lost item. Lying behind a cabinet in some library somewhere. It will be rediscovered in the future – and kept hidden from Asahina Mitsuuru’s masters.”

I blinked, but didn’t say anything. I wasn’t that surprised that the time travelling factions were fighting a shadow war of information, but the fact that I was being given all of this information so freely did puzzle me just a bit.

“It is the personal diary of the con artist who tricked the creature called Makuro into effectively becoming the guardian of the hill on which your school stands,” Fujiwara continued. “He was a thief and a trickster, but rather knowledgeable. He writes that such tokens can also be used as reverse tracking beacons. As long as the creature has a person’s token, she can find that creature anywhere, regardless of distance in space and time.”

So far, this did not surprise me too much.

“And attack them,” Fujiwara concluded, “at her leisure. No matter where you run and hide, no matter how you try to protect yourself, she will find you and extract her due.” She smiled venomously sweetly at this.

A faint whine of sound came from Suou. We all turned to look at him; he was still staring at his plate, but words trickled from his mouth like incidental grains of rice: “Queen’s knight, knight’s queen. Knight’s princess, princess’s knight.”

Silence. For just a moment, Tachibana and Fujiwara looked as confused as I felt, but then Fujiwara’s mask like sneer snapped back into place. She grinned at me.

“There is no knight who is going to protect you from the wrath of the Oni if you do not give her what is required,” she said, sounding for all the world as if she were taunting me. “And you do not even know what it is you need to give her. This is most amusing to me.”

“Fujiwara-san …” Tachibana said, his smile looking even more pained. Lightly, he placed a hand on Fujiwara’s; she frowned darkly and snatched her hand away. “Please. We agreed on this.”

“Agreement is irrelevant,” Fujiwara countered. “This is predetermined, though I might wish it otherwise. I have my orders, and you serve to facilitate them in this case. This, also, was predetermined.”

“Just as you say, Fujiwara-san,” Tachibana agreed, his smile growing a little warmer. “This series of events, this plan B, is inevitable. So shall we get on with it, with a minimum of antagonism? The sooner this is done with, the sooner …?”

Fujiwara huffed, clearly annoyed, but then continued: “My superiors have told me what it is that the con artist promised to the Oni Makuro, the details of the ritual that must be performed to placate her and send her back into her guarding sleep.”

Tachibana took over, his voice sounding excited, or perhaps anxious: “Fujiwara-san’s superiors have also told her that if a week passes without these ceremonies being performed, the creature will be absolved of all promises and agreements. She will likely devour you alive for the affront and destroy North High so as to scour her territory clean. If she allows the Oni Mashiro to walk free, I do not doubt that she will seek out and devour Suzumiya Haruki, power and all. This would be a very bad thing.”

He certainly looked queasy at the thought of Mashiro eating Haruki alive. I guess in his case, this is because he didn’t want ‘the power’ to be lost to Sasaki forever. In my case, I had a bad flashback to seeing Mashiro hold Haruki and shed his blood while she used his powers. ‘Queasy’ is just a word, it can not accurately describe the sensation of snakes writhing in my gut at that memory. And the snakes hatched a whole new nest at the thought of Mashiro walking free with all of Haruki’s power …

“We want you to take possession of the ritual text,” Tachibana concluded. Right on cue, another maid-looking woman appeared with a tray. A stack of printouts was lying thereon, neatly bound together.

Wow. This felt … weird, somehow.

“Why do I have to do this?” I asked, not reaching for the printouts just yet. “If you all know what you have to do, then –“

“You are the contractor,” Tachibana said in a regretful tone of voice. “Had you not made a separate deal with the Oni, had this only been … maintenance, a periodical payment for Makuro’s continuing to do her duty, then it could have been anyone. But now, it has to be you. If you are not the one to make the payment, you will be eaten alive. Please accept the ritual.”

Feeling both apprehensive and completely silly, I reached out and did just that. It was not that thick a stack, and yet it felt curiously heavy.

“Now,” Tachibana said, “there is one more thing. The artefact that the Oni Makuro has taken from you is … special, or so I am told.”

“My hair ribbon?” I asked, nonplussed.

“Consider the source,” Tachibana suggested tactfully.

What? I got my hair ribbon from the future Asahina-san, who … Told me his younger self would receive it from me at a later date. Oh.

“An item out of time,” Tachibana clarified, his smile slightly worried. “Yet another item of proof, if any were needed, of the way Suzumiya Haruki warps the world around him in irresponsible ways. We are uncertain how possessing such an artefact will affect the creature’s powers, so it might be well if you could retrieve it.”

“Just how do you suggest I do that?” I asked, already feeling suspicious.

“There will be an opportunity to do so as you perform the ritual,” Tachibana assured me. “A fair trade. You will give Makuro an item which is technically equivalent, but whose properties are known to us, and which can pose no further danger.”

“What kind of object would that be?” I asked.

Next to me, Suou stirred. He reached into his uniform jacket’s pocket and pulled out a clumsily-wrapped parcel, which he wordlessly placed on top of the printouts in my hands.

“An object out of place,” Tachibana replied after waiting for a moment to see whether Suou would say anything. “This is, perhaps, a mixture of philosophy and science. Since space and time are inextricably linked, an object which should not exist in this place can be considered to be equivalent to an object which should not exist in this time. The explanation is somewhat flawed, but I am assured that this item is created from elements which do not exist anywhere in our galaxy. The rareness, therefore, should make up for the differences.”

I opened the parcel and looked inside. Blinked. “You have got to be joking.”

“I am afraid not,” Tachibana replied. “Rather, I must ask you to start wearing it immediately, so it can be said to be yours when the exchange is made, or you will not be able to reclaim your artefact. Rather, you will most likely be punished for trying to cheat the Oni Makuro.”

“Why do I have to wear something like this?” I objected vehemently. “I’m going to look ridiculous!”

“On the contrary,” Tachibana smiled, that impish gleam returning to his eyes. “I am quite, quite certain it will look … cute.”

“Cute princess,” Suou muttered, dark eyes gazing at some distant horizon.

“And incidentally,” Tachibana concluded, “wearing this … item … is a requirement of the ritual. I would suggest you start reading it as soon as you get home, so you can make the necessary preparations. There are many requirements which must be met. Please allow the Organization to make a small contribution – we regret we can do no more than provide you with a hard copy of the ritual text provided to us by Fujiwara-san, and this small pittance.”

He put an envelope in my hands. Even without opening it, I could guess it was stuffed with money; it was that kind of envelope.

This was … Why do these things keep happening to me? As if I really need to ask. Haruki, I swear …!

“Would you like another cup of tea?” Tachibana asked politely.

Fujiwara was looking out the window again, but I could see the smirk on her face from here.

“This thing,” I said, putting down the text and envelope to hold up the thing Suou had burdened me with. “If it really comes from outside this galaxy, is it even safe to have around? Isn’t it radioactive or something?”

“Most certainly not!” Tachibana assured me. “The Organization I belong to has tested it thoroughly. It is perfectly safe to wear … and you must wear it.”

“I’m going to need more than one cup of tea,” I muttered rebelliously as I looked down at the item I was now turning round and round in my hands. It didn’t feel as if it were made out of plastic at all. The two tips felt more like rock, and the part that should be flexible was certainly that, yet it felt as if it were made out of metal.

“A beer after all, then?” Tachibana chuckled.


Opinions, please? I apologize for the hiatus, but all sorts of stuff happened. (Like a week of scorching heat, which sapped my writing energy …)

Oh god, WHAT IS IT?!
I have a fairly good guess though, with all this talk of princesses. I bet it's a crown, right? lol

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

Has two tips and is considered flexible... I don't think it's a crown...

[Roger Rambo]

The adventure continues.

Previous instalment. (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2468788&postcount=16899)


I think I can safely say that this was the most awkward limo ride of my young life. The fact that it was, so far, the first and only limo ride of my life does not invalidate my claim.

I sat on a nicely upholstered car seat, with my three 'abductors' opposite me. At first, that sneering bitch wanted to sit next to me, but Tachibana muttered something and pulled her over. The three of you should look more uncomfortable, squeezed together like that.

Of course Suou isn't even sweating. That flawed interface does not seem to be subject to the ambient temperature. But what's up with Tachibana and that vile time-traveller not sweating a drop? It's stuffy in here, isn't anyone going to crack a window?

"Do forgive me," Tachibana said, the very image of courtesy, and indicated a mini-bar. How extravagant are you people planning to be? "Would you like a soda," Tachibana said, smilingly ignoring my consternation, "some iced coffee, chilled tea, or perhaps some spring water? Or perhaps you'd prefer a beer ...?"

I'm still a minor, please don't offer me booze. Especially don't offer me booze when I'm alone in a car with three suspicious people, two of whom I know to be capable of kidnapping their opponents. The longer I'm in this car, the dumber I feel for going along with this.

“I’m sorry, I’m sorry,” Tachibana said, laughing at me. “See? There are no alcoholic beverages in the refrigerator. The Organization which watches over Sasaki-san is mindful of the rules and regulations which govern young ladies of your own age.”

Just who do you think you’re talking to?

Fujiwara chose this moment to grumble something under her breath, and turned her head away from me to look out the window. Looks like you’re just posing to me. I mean, this car has tinted windows, you can’t see anything but shadows through them, really. Did you want a beer, and are you annoyed because my presence denies you the chance to have one?

The limousine, which I must admit was a very smooth ride, stopped with the gentlest of shocks.

“Ah, we have arrived,” Tachibana commented needlessly. “Please allow me, ojou-sama.”

Smiling that unnecessary and unwanted smile, he reached past me to open the door and gestured I should be the first one to exit. I was happy enough to do so, even if the air outside wasn’t much cooler than inside. The eerie trio exited right behind me, and Fujiwara made a point of standing too close. She must think I’d run away as soon as I got the chance. The thought did occur to me, I must admit.

The ‘cake shop’, which Tachibana had requested I accompany him to, looked like a nice little family restaurant. There was a sign over the door in English. ‘Mom and pop’? A discrete line of Japanese underneath read: ‘savoury and sweet confections for all tastes’. So far, so good.

What was not good, was that there was a sudden motion behind me, and I felt first a chill motion of air, and then a familiar heavy, tickling sensation against the back of my neck.

“Hey-!” I protested, whirling around.

Fujiwara took a step back, smirking triumphantly and holding my replacement hair ribbon. She tossed it up, and Suou reached out and plucked it out of the air without even looking at it. My ribbon disappeared into his uniform jacket’s pocket, and Tachibana quickly interposed himself between the alien interface and myself.

“Please don’t be upset, please don’t be upset!” he pleaded, waving his hands in soothing gestures.

Are you trying to lower in rage points or something? Give me back my ribbon!

“There is a reason why this was done,” Tachibana assured me. “And we will tell you, I promise most sincerely. For now, shall we enter?”

What is wrong with these people? Apart from the obvious, of course …

As it turned out, more was wrong with them than I had realized. Upon entering the cake shop, I found it was empty apart from the staff. Did these guys rent the whole shop, or is this place always this dead?

A young woman in a maid outfit greeted us with an expressionless face and a bow, and guided us to a booth. I found myself sitting opposite Tachibana and Fujiwara, with the uncomfortable non-presence of Suou at my side. At least they didn’t try to make me sit next to the window, so I’d be trapped … The young lady brought us four menus and stood waiting for us to order.

“Well, this all looks delicious,” Tachibana said after scanning the menu, his smile dimpling his cheeks. “Do you have a preference?”

“Just water, please,” I muttered. Extravagance all around … I could afford some of those cakes, no problem. But if I did buy some, I wouldn’t have enough allowance left for the rest of the month. I have to keep in mind that I’m likely to have to pay for the SOS-Brigade, after all …

“Four orders of the cherry cream apple pie and four cups of jasmine tea, please,” Tachibana said, smiling at the waitress. He smilingly waved away my protest. “My treat, to apologize for the inconveniences you have been subjected to. Please; you must allow me to be a gentleman and make up for my mistakes.”

What kind of gentleman pulls stuff like this?

The lady went away, and returned shortly thereafter with a pot of tea and four cups on a tray. She’d found a friend somewhere, who was carrying a whole pie on a tray. The thing was slathered in cream, in which bright red cherries floated like warning buoys. Both trays were deposited on our table, after which they went and got us some plates and cutlery to go with it. I had to admit it all smelled good …

“Thank you, that will be excellent,” Tachibana complimented the expressionless ladies. “You may retire.”

They left without comment. Hey, they’re at least five years older than any of the people at this table who weren’t artificially created by an alien species! Is it really okay for you to order them around like that?

Tachibana only smiled, and started pouring tea and cutting slices of pie. Fujiwara sipped from her cup without commenting, while Suou regarded his foodstuffs as if they were an intriguing puzzle.

“Well then,” Tachibana said after he’d taken a bite. “I am sure you would like us to get to the point. But let me first ask: were you injured at all during the events on Setsubun? I understand considerable violence was unleashed.”

“No,” I replied curtly. “I’m fine.”

“I am relieved,” Tachibana said, his dimples deepening. “If you had been injured, I was of a mind to coerce Fujiwara-san to provide us with healing technology from the future.”

He chuckled at this, though Fujiwara gave a sharp sniff and turned her head to look out the window.

“You were, however, robbed,” Tachibana went on. “Your hair ribbon,” he clarified when I looked blank.

“I can buy another one,” I replied in a level tone of voice. “Unless you keep stealing them all, it’s not a problem.” I looked sideways at Suou, who said nothing and kept staring at his food.

“I am sure you are familiar with the legend of Makuro and Mashiro, however,” Tachibana said as he turned his teacup around and around, almost as if he were preparing for a tea ceremony.

Wait a minute, how are you familiar with it? Wasn’t that book supposed to be rare, or something?

“Well,” Tachibana said apologetically, “the Organization I belong to does keep a close eye on the cohorts of Koizumi Itsuko. Especially in … exciting times like these. The recent events at North High have attracted a lot of attention from various people.”

I felt a cold chill run down my back as I remembered the silent interfaces gathering in the shadows, the night when I was bringing Makuro her beans. Who else had been watching, that I didn’t even know existed?

“The events on Setsubun have caused a lot of concern,” Tachibana went on as if reading my thoughts, “with a lot of groups even beyond the ones represented in this room. Many people fear that the creatures which were created by Suzumiya Haruki add a chaotic element to an already unstable situation. Frankly, Suzumiya Haruki is chaotic enough.”

I couldn’t really argue with that, but still. So you guys think Haruki created the Oni as well?

“Opinions are somewhat divided,” Tachibana admitted after a sharp sniff from Fujiwara, who continued to look out the window while sipping her tea. “Still, what other logical conclusion could be drawn? Suzumiya Haruki unjustly wields the power of the divine, and no one in the Group which watches over Sasaki-san had ever encountered such creatures before outside of storybooks and ancient mythology.”

Fujiwara sniffed again. Suou refrained from comment, and just continued to look at his plate – which was empty now? When did he start eating? I never even heard him pick up his cutlery!

“You yourself have observed that these creatures are highly dangerous, have you not?” Tachibana asked, his smile fading into a serious, earnest expression.

As my little brother would say: “Well, duh.”

“I can see in your expression that you agree with me on this much,” Tachibana went on. “So please, will you not reconsider? With your help, we could snatch away the very existence of these dangerous and hostile creatures, so they will never again be able to harm you.”

“What are you talking about?” I heard myself ask.

“These dangerous creatures are spawned by Suzumiya Haruki’s abuse of the divine power!” Tachibana said, reaching across the table to seize my hands. “If the power is removed from Suzumiya-san, then the very thing that grants the creatures life vanishes. If you, princess, will commit yourself to your true knight–“

“No.”

Really, what else was I going to say? Why would anyone be surprised? There have always been dangers connected to associating with Haruki, why would this latest wrinkle make me change my mind?

Tachibana’s face twitched at my blunt refusal, but he just heaved a gentle sigh and let go of my hands. Fujiwara snorted contemptuously: “I told you that this series of events was determined, but you would not listen. All you have managed to do is embarrass yourself in front of … this.”

This what, you sneering bitch?

“You were right, Fujiwara-san,” Tachibana agreed with a slightly pained smile. “Very well. In that case, we move on to plan B. If you would be so kind …?”

Fujiwara set down her cup and turned to look at me, a contemptuous smirk on her lips.

“You lost your ribbon to that … thing, did you not?” she asked, her tone of voice betraying a sense of vast superiority. “The token which, according to the stories, allows the Oni to assume a human’s shape.”

We covered this, thank you.

“There is another use for such things,” Fujiwara went on. “You know of one book which details the two beings you have encountered. There is at least one more such. Of course you would not know about it, since it is, in this current temporal frame, a lost item. Lying behind a cabinet in some library somewhere. It will be rediscovered in the future – and kept hidden from Asahina Mitsuuru’s masters.”

I blinked, but didn’t say anything. I wasn’t that surprised that the time travelling factions were fighting a shadow war of information, but the fact that I was being given all of this information so freely did puzzle me just a bit.

“It is the personal diary of the con artist who tricked the creature called Makuro into effectively becoming the guardian of the hill on which your school stands,” Fujiwara continued. “He was a thief and a trickster, but rather knowledgeable. He writes that such tokens can also be used as reverse tracking beacons. As long as the creature has a person’s token, she can find that creature anywhere, regardless of distance in space and time.”

So far, this did not surprise me too much.

“And attack them,” Fujiwara concluded, “at her leisure. No matter where you run and hide, no matter how you try to protect yourself, she will find you and extract her due.” She smiled venomously sweetly at this.

A faint whine of sound came from Suou. We all turned to look at him; he was still staring at his plate, but words trickled from his mouth like incidental grains of rice: “Queen’s knight, knight’s queen. Knight’s princess, princess’s knight.”

Silence. For just a moment, Tachibana and Fujiwara looked as confused as I felt, but then Fujiwara’s mask like sneer snapped back into place. She grinned at me.

“There is no knight who is going to protect you from the wrath of the Oni if you do not give her what is required,” she said, sounding for all the world as if she were taunting me. “And you do not even know what it is you need to give her. This is most amusing to me.”

“Fujiwara-san …” Tachibana said, his smile looking even more pained. Lightly, he placed a hand on Fujiwara’s; she frowned darkly and snatched her hand away. “Please. We agreed on this.”

“Agreement is irrelevant,” Fujiwara countered. “This is predetermined, though I might wish it otherwise. I have my orders, and you serve to facilitate them in this case. This, also, was predetermined.”

“Just as you say, Fujiwara-san,” Tachibana agreed, his smile growing a little warmer. “This series of events, this plan B, is inevitable. So shall we get on with it, with a minimum of antagonism? The sooner this is done with, the sooner …?”

Fujiwara huffed, clearly annoyed, but then continued: “My superiors have told me what it is that the con artist promised to the Oni Makuro, the details of the ritual that must be performed to placate her and send her back into her guarding sleep.”

Tachibana took over, his voice sounding excited, or perhaps anxious: “Fujiwara-san’s superiors have also told her that if a week passes without these ceremonies being performed, the creature will be absolved of all promises and agreements. She will likely devour you alive for the affront and destroy North High so as to scour her territory clean. If she allows the Oni Mashiro to walk free, I do not doubt that she will seek out and devour Suzumiya Haruki, power and all. This would be a very bad thing.”

He certainly looked queasy at the thought of Mashiro eating Haruki alive. I guess in his case, this is because he didn’t want ‘the power’ to be lost to Sasaki forever. In my case, I had a bad flashback to seeing Mashiro hold Haruki and shed his blood while she used his powers. ‘Queasy’ is just a word, it can not accurately describe the sensation of snakes writhing in my gut at that memory. And the snakes hatched a whole new nest at the thought of Mashiro walking free with all of Haruki’s power …

“We want you to take possession of the ritual text,” Tachibana concluded. Right on cue, another maid-looking woman appeared with a tray. A stack of printouts was lying thereon, neatly bound together.

Wow. This felt … weird, somehow.

“Why do I have to do this?” I asked, not reaching for the printouts just yet. “If you all know what you have to do, then –“

“You are the contractor,” Tachibana said in a regretful tone of voice. “Had you not made a separate deal with the Oni, had this only been … maintenance, a periodical payment for Makuro’s continuing to do her duty, then it could have been anyone. But now, it has to be you. If you are not the one to make the payment, you will be eaten alive. Please accept the ritual.”

Feeling both apprehensive and completely silly, I reached out and did just that. It was not that thick a stack, and yet it felt curiously heavy.

“Now,” Tachibana said, “there is one more thing. The artefact that the Oni Makuro has taken from you is … special, or so I am told.”

“My hair ribbon?” I asked, nonplussed.

“Consider the source,” Tachibana suggested tactfully.

What? I got my hair ribbon from the future Asahina-san, who … Told me his younger self would receive it from me at a later date. Oh.

“An item out of time,” Tachibana clarified, his smile slightly worried. “Yet another item of proof, if any were needed, of the way Suzumiya Haruki warps the world around him in irresponsible ways. We are uncertain how possessing such an artefact will affect the creature’s powers, so it might be well if you could retrieve it.”

“Just how do you suggest I do that?” I asked, already feeling suspicious.

“There will be an opportunity to do so as you perform the ritual,” Tachibana assured me. “A fair trade. You will give Makuro an item which is technically equivalent, but whose properties are known to us, and which can pose no further danger.”

“What kind of object would that be?” I asked.

Next to me, Suou stirred. He reached into his uniform jacket’s pocket and pulled out a clumsily-wrapped parcel, which he wordlessly placed on top of the printouts in my hands.

“An object out of place,” Tachibana replied after waiting for a moment to see whether Suou would say anything. “This is, perhaps, a mixture of philosophy and science. Since space and time are inextricably linked, an object which should not exist in this place can be considered to be equivalent to an object which should not exist in this time. The explanation is somewhat flawed, but I am assured that this item is created from elements which do not exist anywhere in our galaxy. The rareness, therefore, should make up for the differences.”

I opened the parcel and looked inside. Blinked. “You have got to be joking.”

“I am afraid not,” Tachibana replied. “Rather, I must ask you to start wearing it immediately, so it can be said to be yours when the exchange is made, or you will not be able to reclaim your artefact. Rather, you will most likely be punished for trying to cheat the Oni Makuro.”

“Why do I have to wear something like this?” I objected vehemently. “I’m going to look ridiculous!”

“On the contrary,” Tachibana smiled, that impish gleam returning to his eyes. “I am quite, quite certain it will look … cute.”

“Cute princess,” Suou muttered, dark eyes gazing at some distant horizon.

“And incidentally,” Tachibana concluded, “wearing this … item … is a requirement of the ritual. I would suggest you start reading it as soon as you get home, so you can make the necessary preparations. There are many requirements which must be met. Please allow the Organization to make a small contribution – we regret we can do no more than provide you with a hard copy of the ritual text provided to us by Fujiwara-san, and this small pittance.”

He put an envelope in my hands. Even without opening it, I could guess it was stuffed with money; it was that kind of envelope.

This was … Why do these things keep happening to me? As if I really need to ask. Haruki, I swear …!

“Would you like another cup of tea?” Tachibana asked politely.

Fujiwara was looking out the window again, but I could see the smirk on her face from here.

“This thing,” I said, putting down the text and envelope to hold up the thing Suou had burdened me with. “If it really comes from outside this galaxy, is it even safe to have around? Isn’t it radioactive or something?”

“Most certainly not!” Tachibana assured me. “The Organization I belong to has tested it thoroughly. It is perfectly safe to wear … and you must wear it.”

“I’m going to need more than one cup of tea,” I muttered rebelliously as I looked down at the item I was now turning round and round in my hands. It didn’t feel as if it were made out of plastic at all. The two tips felt more like rock, and the part that should be flexible was certainly that, yet it felt as if it were made out of metal.

“A beer after all, then?” Tachibana chuckled.


Opinions, please? I apologize for the hiatus, but all sorts of stuff happened. (Like a week of scorching heat, which sapped my writing energy …)
Excuse me I need new pants.

And again I haven't even read yet.

edit:Ok, I read it, commentary.

I LOLed at this part

"“If the power is removed from Suzumiya-san, then the very thing that grants the creatures life vanishes. If you, princess, will commit yourself to your true knight–“
"no"

Rather blatant isn't he?

I can sorta see why they'd wanna take Kyonko's ribbon if they wanted to have her wear something else, but it seems like there's something else going on there. We also have no idea what they gave Kyonko to wear for the exchange.

[CrowKenobi]

Oh god, WHAT IS IT?!
I have a fairly good guess though, with all this talk of princesses. I bet it's a crown, right? lol

Has two tips and is considered flexible... I don't think it's a crown...This:


http://img17.imageshack.us/img17/5130/grab17522.jpg (http://img24.imageshack.us/i/grab17519.jpg/):heh::heh::heh::heehee::heh::heh::heh:

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

What I was thinking... though... what the hell kind of ritual requires that? :heh:

[scify]

This:


http://img17.imageshack.us/img17/5130/grab17522.jpg (http://img24.imageshack.us/i/grab17519.jpg/):heh::heh::heh::heehee::heh::heh::heh:

Magical-moe cat ears...

I wonder if they'd do this:
http://i7.photobucket.com/albums/y285/scify/Kyoneko.jpg

Also, these two installments really reinforce my need to go read the novels on Baka-Tsuki... I'm sort of dreading it, though.

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

Yay, catgirl!

... sorry :heh:

[Kaisos Erranon]

I can only say "nyaa".

Oh, and that I still love Tachibana.

[DJ_RockmanX]

Kemonomimi... sign me up.

[Kaisos Erranon]

I think it's great how AoTS listed all the artwork we need.

If only we had more active artists... >_>

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

I'd help with that, but my art is failure on an epic scale.

Also... um, yeah, still need to do other things I've volunteered for first. :heh:

[Heatth]

I think it's great how AoTS listed all the artwork we need.

If only we had more active artists... >_>


Is also usefull for me. Saying when they appear and all. Also his sugestions (BTW, I menange to do his green text effect suggestion).

More artists would be good. Even if they can't draw. Just helping Binjovi would be great. Also, we need some other kind of images. Like the desing for the dialogue box, menu and etcetera. Also some images for the visual effects. I am needing one for the "TV turning off" thing, for exemple (a screen with the exact moment of that effect).

*e*
Canada's art lists should be archived, so it wouldn't be lost. BTW, wasn't someone going to take ove the VN archive?

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

More artists would be good. Even if they can't draw. Just helping Binjovi would be great.

When I say "failure on an epic scale," I mean "If I were to attempt to contribute, it would probably drag everyone else's work down." :heh:

[Heatth]

When I say "failure on an epic scale," I mean "If I were to attempt to contribute, it would probably drag everyone else's work down." :heh:

I am sure someone else could help in something. Anything. No one else can use photoshop here?

[CanadaAotS]

I think it's great how AoTS listed all the artwork we need.

If only we had more active artists... >_>

Part of the reason why I started up the list was because I'm probably getting a tablet for my PC soon... I haven't drawn hardly anything since highschool, but I might be able to help out then.

At least if I do I'll already know what needs to be done, right? lol

[Selofain]

I think this is when I pop up again to repeat my offer to help. I have photoshop and I know my way around it, and I have a tablet, and I'd be absolutely delighted to help. Strictly as touch-up artist/inker/flat colors thing, since you really, really don't want me drawing for this.

Has Binjovi come up with anything since the Imouto-chan sprite in Kyon's room?

[DJ_RockmanX]

Has Binjovi come up with anything since the Imouto-chan sprite in Kyon's room?

Nope. This is why I'm taking whatever help we can get.

[Nanao-kun]

I think it's great how AoTS listed all the artwork we need.

If only we had more active artists... >_>

If you happen to be willing to wait about 3-5 years, I could ask my younger sister to the the artwork. She's quite fond of drawing manga style artwork. Although she tends to focus more on a "shoujo" type style.

[Arceon]

Funny you people are discussing art, as I have just returned from an ages old hiatus and just received a Wacom Intuos4 Medium.

Did I mention I'm bored and have obscene amounts of free time?

On the other hand, I have currently missed 300+ pages worth of material and am currently abandoning reading through the entire thing to catch up and have decided to figure out things as I go along from here. Wish me luck. (Although, I perhaps should hunt for that list of art needed.)

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

You shouldn't have to go back too far... I don't think we've been posting a lot since then. :heh:

... It's funny... Whenever I even remotely consider volunteering, there seems to be a flood of people willing to fill the position... oh well, I suppose it's a good thing in this case...

[CanadaAotS]

The Crossroads of Haruhi Suzumiya Visual Novel Project Archive v2.0

Most of this post was originally copy-pasted from dkellis' VN Archive. Thanks for all the time you put into it dkellis!

This post will be updated as new chapters are added.

If I miss any, please PM me with a link to the post in question, and I'll add it in. If your text is an edit of someone else's, please mention it explicitly in the post.
If I mislink or mislabel something, please do the same.


Flowcharts

Day 0 Flowchart and Outline (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2330244&postcount=14447)

Day 1 Flowchart and Outline (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2329347&postcount=14436)

Day 2 Flowchart and Outline (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2369889&postcount=14927)

Day 3 Flowchart and Outline (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2386779&postcount=15316)

Day 4 Flowchart and Outline (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2392427&postcount=15426)

Day 5 Flowchart and Outline (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2398036&postcount=15563)


Scripts


September the First, Day Zero

Universe 1

Prologue - A Hidden World, Ripples in Space (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2299935&postcount=14251) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2380474&postcount=15076))

Morning- The End of Eight (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2383339&postcount=15175) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2383712&postcount=15190))

Classroom- Ordinary Day (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2411609&postcount=15904) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2411715&postcount=15907))

Brigade HQ- Poker in a Clubroom (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2383935&postcount=15204) (Kaisos's addition (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2418718&postcount=16163), Jintor's re-edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2419266&postcount=16189))

Afternoon- Decision Point (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2386806&postcount=15318) (Kaisos's addition (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2419074&postcount=16179), Jintor's re-edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2419269&postcount=16190))

Various (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2425249&postcount=16310) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2425791&postcount=16317)) Includes:

Library- You Okay?
My Room: Existentialism- Another World
Way Home- Dr. Itsuki's Prescription
Corridor- So Confused


Restaurant- This Isn't a Date! (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2419237&postcount=16184) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2419311&postcount=16196))

(The following four scenes were made into seperate posts by both Kaisos and Jintor after the above “Various” post, other then “Existentialism” and “So Confused”, which only Jintor made a seperate posts for.)

Library- You Okay? (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2388202&postcount=15341) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2426778&postcount=16358))

My Room- Existentialism: Another World (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2426781&postcount=16360))

Way Home- Dr. Itsuki's Prescription (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2388556&postcount=15344) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2426784&postcount=16362))

Corridor- So Confused (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2426786&postcount=16363))

Universe A

Various (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2426688&postcount=16353) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2426774&postcount=16356)) Includes:

Morning- Another End, Another Eight
Classroom- Another Ordinary Day
Brigade HQ- Poker in a Second Clubroom
Brigade HQ- Afternoon- Decision Point, Again


(The following four scenes were made into seperate posts by both Kaisos and Jintor after the above “Various” post, other then “Poker in a Second Clubroom” and “Decision Point, Again”, which only Jintor made seperate posts for.)

Morning- Another End, Another Eight (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2396460&postcount=15558) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2443104&postcount=16518))

Classroom- Another Ordinary Day (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2411609&postcount=15904) (Jintor's edit of original (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2411715&postcount=15907), Jintor's edit of revised (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2443105&postcount=16519))

Brigade HQ- Poker in a Second Clubroom (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2443109&postcount=16520))

Brigade HQ- Afternoon- Decision Point, Again (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2443112&postcount=16521))

Restaurant- Don't Waste Food (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2446642&postcount=16537) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2446723&postcount=16543))

Library- It's Unique (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2448459&postcount=16561) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2448550&postcount=16570))

Existentialism- Other World (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2448563&postcount=16572) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2448611&postcount=16576))

Way Home-Professor Itsuko's Love-love Theory (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2451469&postcount=16644) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2451944&postcount=16707))

Classroom- Shoutacon (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2451919&postcount=16705) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2452061&postcount=16721))

Night time, Both Universes

Our Room- Parallel Connection (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2453053&postcount=16746) (Jintor's "edit" (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2453193&postcount=16748))

Night time, Universe 1

My Room- Oyasumi (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2451984&postcount=16712) (Jintor's Edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2452164&postcount=16722))

Interlude 1: Dark People in a Dark Room (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2383339&postcount=15175) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2383712&postcount=15190))


September the Second, Day One

Universe A

Morning- Breakfast with the Little Brother (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2467912&postcount=16873) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2479443&postcount=17130))

To School- Summer Heat (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2472912&postcount=16999) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2481173&postcount=17153))

Lunchtime- The Heart of a Maiden is Fragile (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2475296&postcount=17047) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2486510&postcount=17201))

Classroom - Personal Space (Choice) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2452403&postcount=16724) (Kaisos's Edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2477117&postcount=17089))

Hallway- I Will Have My Revenge (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2477119&postcount=17090) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2497351&postcount=17282))

Clubroom- Haruki-sama's Back to School Brigade Meeting EXTRAORDINARY (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2479182&postcount=17125) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2488674&postcount=17228))

Clubroom- Request- Time Paradox (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2479247&postcount=17127) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2489130&postcount=17239))

Universe 1

To School- Why, Naze? (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2452402&postcount=16723)

Classroom- Normality (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2488531&postcount=17220) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2497701&postcount=17295))

Clubroom- The Falling Satellite (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2488539&postcount=17221) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2497898&postcount=17297))

Classroom- Guillotine (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2488544&postcount=17222) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2497981&postcount=17300))

Hallway- I Will Have My Revenge (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2488550&postcount=17223) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2497989&postcount=17301))

Clubroom- Request (Universe 1) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2490581&postcount=17245) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2499161&postcount=17309))

Universe A

Clubroom- Open and Close (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2490586&postcount=17246) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2509809&postcount=17412))

Evening Streets of Nishinomiya- Paradox, Redux (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2490596&postcount=17247) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2509828&postcount=17413))

Universe 1

Interlude 2: A Room- It's Too Dark in Here (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2490618&postcount=17248) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2509835&postcount=17414))


September the Third, Day Two

Universe 1

Morning- Carton of Eggs (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2514721&postcount=17465) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2517559&postcount=17539))

To School- Temporal (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2515155&postcount=17478) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2519894&postcount=17570))

Classroom- Late for Class? (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2522001&postcount=17600) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2522861&postcount=17641))

Lunchtime: Clubroom- Totally Unreasonable (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2522455&postcount=17624) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2522763&postcount=17638))

Universe A

To School- Flux (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2522530&postcount=17626) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2524466&postcount=17657))

Hallway- So Very Unreasonable (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2522667&postcount=17634) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2528136&postcount=17702))

Universe 1

Lunchtime: Another Hallway- The Way of the Nanpa (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2531659&postcount=17752) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2537445&postcount=17850))

After School- Clubroom: Totally Cancelled (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2531865&postcount=17766) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2537463&postcount=17851))

Universe A

Evening- Why is the Milk Gone? (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2534072&postcount=17792) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2537475&postcount=17852))

Universe 1

Night- Another Ordinary Night (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2534209&postcount=17795) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2537477&postcount=17853))


September the Fourth, Day Three

Universe A

Morning- Wakeup Call (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2536271&postcount=17829) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2537489&postcount=17854))

Universe 1

Morning- Wakeup Carefree (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2536316&postcount=17831) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2537494&postcount=17855))

Classroom- Before-Class Ritual (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2540912&postcount=17911) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2546585&postcount=18014))

Universe A

Classroom- So Very Unreasonable (II) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2541187&postcount=17925) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2551943&postcount=18066))

Clubroom- Waste of Time (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2541300&postcount=17932) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2582716&postcount=18560))

Universe 1

Classroom(?)- The Wrong Side of the Fence (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2551286&postcount=18043) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2588656&postcount=18589))

Classroom- The Dance Begins (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2551502&postcount=18055) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2595147&postcount=18644))

Cat and Mouse (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2553248&postcount=18078) (Jintor's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2595230&postcount=18648))

School Gate- Bells are Ringing (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2564486&postcount=18175) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2645959&postcount=19740))

Classroom- Mutants from Space (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2567147&postcount=18201) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2645974&postcount=19741))

Clubroom- Revenge (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2567669&postcount=18233) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2646003&postcount=19743))

Universe A

Clubroom- The Answers (I) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2569484&postcount=18254) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2646026&postcount=19744))

Clubroom- The Answers (II) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2570839&postcount=18263) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2646047&postcount=19745))

Clubroom- Separation (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2572830&postcount=18301) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2646083&postcount=19746))

Emerald Unsanity: The Grass is Always Greener (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2577643&postcount=18412)

Streets of Nishinomiya- The Newborn (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2577645&postcount=18413) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2647058&postcount=19762))

His House- Intruder Alert (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2588078&postcount=18571) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2648466&postcount=19779))

A Room- Left Behind (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2588195&postcount=18575) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2648491&postcount=19780))


September the Fifth, Day Four

Morning (To School)- The Darkness Before Dawn (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2595971&postcount=18674) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2648526&postcount=19781))

To School- Attractive New Face (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2596264&postcount=18696) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2649776&postcount=19852))

Morning- Dispute (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2600095&postcount=18826) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2652578&postcount=19880))

Classroom- Someone's Watching (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2600107&postcount=18827) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2652578&postcount=19880))

Hallway- Peering In (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2611198&postcount=19169) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2659068&postcount=19976))

Old Shack- The Answers (III) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2611458&postcount=19181) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2659070&postcount=19977))

Old Shack- The Answers (IV) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2617647&postcount=19259) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2659072&postcount=19978))

Interlude 4: Other Side- Sealed Realities (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2627311&postcount=19371) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2659075&postcount=19979))

Cafeteria- Narrow Escape (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2628024&postcount=19402) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2659115&postcount=19980))

Clubroom- When the Cat's Away (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2643693&postcount=19672) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2659120&postcount=19981))

Classroom- Cancelled (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2645389&postcount=19704) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2660665&postcount=20002))

Hallway- Stop Stalking Me! (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2645620&postcount=19728) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2660688&postcount=20003))

Hallway- The Ponytailed Girl, Again/Hallway- The Pretty Girl, Again (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2671834&postcount=20087) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2696829&postcount=20429))

Hallway: A Familiar Laugh (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2672068&postcount=20100) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2696856&postcount=20430))

Hallway- Pitiful (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2680851&postcount=20202) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2696961&postcount=20439))

After School- Walking Home (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2684104&postcount=20243) (scify's edit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2697328&postcount=20446))

Interlude 05: The Acceleration in the Dark Room (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2684392&postcount=20252)

Streets of Nishinomiya- The Power of Love (I) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2686747&postcount=20281)

Interlude 06: The Search (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2684335&postcount=20250)

"Hotel"- The Power of Love (II) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2686827&postcount=20289)

Interlude 07: Irritation (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2695252&postcount=20384)

My Room- Headphones (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2695381&postcount=20393)

Interlude 08: Thunder Rumbling (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2697923&postcount=20455)

The Park- Itsuko Pillow (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2699120&postcount=20468)

Interlude 09: Awakening (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2699380&postcount=20481)

My Room- Sleeping (Headphones II) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2699475&postcount=20484)


September the Sixth, Day Five

Memories- Flashes in Space (Rhapsody) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2700031&postcount=20501)

Art Direction and Checklist

Prologue (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2517968&postcount=17545)
September the First, Day Zero, Universe 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2518203&postcount=17550)
September the First, Day Zero, Universe A (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2520545&postcount=17580)
September the First, Day Zero, Night time (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2522365&postcount=17620)
September the Second, Day One (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2525820&postcount=17673)
September the Third, Day Two (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2646975&postcount=19760)

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For the Genderbending of Haruhi Suzumiya Story Archive, see here (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1446680&postcount=860).
For the Complete List of Art for Crossroads, see here (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2528213&postcount=17704).

[DJ_RockmanX]

Again. Whatever help we can get.

Glad to see you back Arceon.

And nice archive post AotS.

[Jintor]

Oh thanks Canada, I see I've missed a thingy.

[Jintor]

So Very Unreasonable

"The school day passed normally. Well, as normal as it ever gets around here."

"As the bell for lunch rang, I stretched and reached for my lunchbox. Because I can never get up in the mornings, I’m always sure to prepare my lunch the previous night. I’m really looking forward to eating it."


Haruki: Kyon! I have a job for you!


Of course. I can’t have a single moment of true happiness or I lose my soul forever. That’d be too much to ask.


Haruki: "Your mission today is... drumroll, please …to make our website manlier!"

Kyonko: "…Exactly what does that mean?"

Haruki: "Hell if I know. But that's your problem!"


"He admitted it!"


Haruki: "I was just looking at the site yesterday. It sucks."

Kyonko: "And whose fault is that?"

Haruki: "Yours. You were the one that made the site, right?"


"So now, because that’s an argument I can’t even hope to win, I’m taking my lunchbox to the clubroom to inject some testosterone into our website."

"Or something."

"On the way there…"


Itsuko: "Ah, there you are. I was looking for you."

Kyonko: "Oh! Hey. What’s up?"


"She’s leaning comfortably against a wall, as though she expected me to come this way. Um. Is my route to the clubroom that predictable?"


Itsuko: "I just wanted to discuss what happened to you yesterday."

Kyonko: "Huh. Really?"


[DECISION POINT HERE]

1) "What happened yesterday?"
2) "You know about that?"


Look of Pity

Kyonko: "What happened yesterday?"

Itsuko: "…"


"She looks at me with an expression I’ve never seen on her before."

"Is that… pity?!"


Kyonko: "...Don’t give me that look."

Itsuko: "…Sigh. You do know what I’m talking about, correct? The temporal flux yesterday?"

Kyonko: "Oh! That. Yes, I know about that. Of course. Haha."


"I’m an idiot."


Itsuko: "Would you walk with me while we talk? I have something to pick up in the clubroom anyway."

Kyonko: "Sure."


"I’ve noticed before, but Itsuko walks in a way that accentuates her hips. I’m not quite sure whether it’s intentional or not, though it probably is, knowing her."


Itsuko: "So you didn’t notice anything at all? Nothing?"

Kyonko: "No, well, except…"

Itsuko: "Except what?"

Kyonko: "I heard the sound of water dripping. It sounded like a ripple."

Itsuko: "Odd."

Kyonko: "And, well, I haven’t told anyone else this, but… two nights ago, I saw someone in my room."

Itsuko: "You saw someone? Who was it?"

Kyonko: "I don’t know. It was only for like a millisecond, but I can swear I saw him."

Itsuko: "'Him'? Are you sure it was male?"

Kyonko: "Well, I got the impression of someone a lot larger than me, so I assumed it was a guy."


"Itsuko stops walking for a minute, with her finger to her lips."


Itsuko: "This is all very strange. I’ve never heard of anything quite like this."

Kyonko: "I figured we could go ask Nagato…"

Itsuko: "That would be a good idea. Also, I would like you to call me next time something like this happens to you."

Kyonko: "Yeah. Really, it’s kind of cree—"


"We turn a corner, and—"

"Control."

"Alt."

"Delete."

"A bad joke."

"Everyone present laughs out of politeness."

"It’s the end!"

"-my brain is filled with the sounds of ripples."

*KSSSSSH*

Wouldn’t You Like to Know?


Kyonko: "You know about that?"


"Itsuko crosses her fingers in front of her mouth."


Itsuko: "Indeed I do. I know that you spent yesterday in a state of temporal flux, and were contacted by Mitsuuru Asahina-san about it."

Kyonko: "How do you learn these things so quickly!?"

Itsuko: "Fufu. That’s a secret~. One that you’ll never know."


"…I guess her Agency just has a lot of spies? Everywhere? Including those hiding in parks in the dead of night?"


Itsuko: "Would you walk with me while we talk? I have something to pick up in the clubroom anyway."

Kyonko: "Yeah, sure."


"I’ve noticed before, but Itsuko walks in a way that accentuates her hips. I’m not quite sure whether it’s intentional or not, though it probably is, knowing her."


Itsuko: "So you didn’t notice anything at all? Nothing?"

Kyonko: "No, well, except…"

Itsuko: "Except what?"

Kyonko: "I heard the sound of water dripping. It sounded like a ripple."

Itsuko: "Odd."

Kyonko: "And, well, I haven’t told anyone else this, but… two nights ago, I saw someone in my room."

Itsuko: "You saw someone? Who was it?"

Kyonko: "I don’t know. It was only for like a millisecond, but I can swear I saw him."

Itsuko: "'Him'? Are you sure it was male?"

Kyonko: "Well, I got the impression of someone a lot larger than me, so I assumed it was a guy."


"Itsuko stops walking for a minute, with her finger to her lips."


Itsuko: "This is all very strange. I’ve never heard of anything quite like this."

Kyonko: "I figured we could go ask Nagato…"

Itsuko: "That would be a good idea. Also, I would like you to call me next time something like this happens to you."

Kyonko: "Yeah. Really, it’s kind of cree—"


"We turn a corner, and—"

"Control."

"Alt."

"Delete."

"A bad joke."

"It’s the end! Or is it the beginning?"

"-my brain is filled with the sounds of ripples."

*KSSSSSH*



My heaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaad

[CanadaAotS]

Alright, I've nuked my last post and replaced it with the BRAND SPANKING NEW VN ARCHIVE!

In case you're too lazy to simply go back to the previous page:
http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2527752&postcount=17699

I'll be taking over from dkellis it seems. After going through everything, reformatting it all, fixing up small errors, etc. I can truly feel his pain.

The link to the VN Archive will be in my signature in just a moment.

[CanadaAotS]

And now, my last bit of work for the night:

Crossroads Complete List of Art


I'll update this post whenever I make a new checklist and something needs to be added to the complete list. Everything is ordered by their appearance in the VN, this way any potential artists will know what has to be done first.
Anything that's been drawn (as far as I know) will have a strike-through.

Backgrounds:
Day Zero:
Kyon's Room (Day) (Finished by Binjovi)
Kyon's Kitchen
Outside the School
Kyon's Classroom
Outside the Old School Building
Clubroom
School Library
Streets of Nishinomiya (Late Afternoon)
Kyon's Room (Late Afternoon OR Night)
School Corridor
Asahina's Classroom
Outside Kitaguchi Station
Inside the Restaurant
Day One:
On the Way to School

Sprites:
Day Zero:
Kyon's Little Sister
Taniguchi (Male)
Kunikida (Male)
Haruhi
Yuki
Mikuru
Itsuki
Kyon
Kyonko's Little Brother
Taniguchi (Female)
Kunikida (Female)
Haruki
Yuuki
Mitsuuru
Itsuko
Kyonko
Day One:
CSP (female)
CPS (male)
Mitsuuru (French Maid) (delicious trap)
Mitsuuru (Frog Suit) (lol)
Big Mitsuuru

Event CG:
Prologue:
Stars in the Water
Gray Classroom
Class of Drones
Yuki Infodump Scene
Mikuru Infodump Scene
Itsuki Infodump Scene
Haruhi Kiss Scene
Baseball Field
CRACK
GREEN
Giant Chess Board
Giant Cave Cricket
Dead Man - Remote Island Syndrome
Endless Eights – Meet up at the Park
Endless Eights – Stargazing on the Roof
Day Zero:
Woken Up by Imouto (Finished by Binjovi)
Haruhi in Class Looking Pissed
Day Zero Night:
Dark People in a Dark Room
Day One:
MORNING WAKE-UP ATTACK!
Day Two:
Night Time Guest
Girl in the Window

Miscellaneous Stuff:
Chatbox Design
ADV Box Design (For the Prologue)
*FFFffzzztt* TV Turning Off effect
*KSSSSSSHHH* Static effect
Green Tint effect
Menu Design
Logo

[DJ_RockmanX]

Nice work for one who has returned only recently. Cookies are in order for you, as well as dkellis who was the first to put up with this crap.

[Heatth]

Wow, good work, Canada.

However, before anyone start to do anything, we should wait for Binjovi say something. He has been busy lattely, true, but he probably has some sketchs already done.

Also, could you, Canada, check "Kyon's Room (Day)"? As you can see on that post (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=2389504#post2389504), it is already done. We need a "Kyonko's Room" too right? A very similar one, but not identical

And please add an "other" category. There are some othe type of art we are needing:
-We need a desing for the dialogue box. Like the one on the binjovi post above.
-A desing for another dialogue box. This time occuping most of the screen, for the Prologue. Like in Fate/Stay Night.
-An image for the "TV turning OFF" effect. Hard to explain, I need a image from when de TV is turning off, the exact moment when the "white light" (horizontal whitle line and strange dot on the center) are show.
-Desings for the menus.

BTW, sory for make you work even more on the "last bit of work for the night" :p

[CanadaAotS]

We should probably get a logo too. I've added that to the list as well as the *KSSSSSSHHH* effect. What'd we decide to do with that by the way?

[Heatth]

Yeah, we need a logo.

The *KSSSSSSHHH* is already done. It is a TV static isn't it? I did as 5 static images animated (0.13s for each image). I am not entirely satisfied, though. I friend suggested it was because the "dots" are too thin, so I will try to change this latter.

Thanks again for your work.

*e*

Oh, yeah, we are still needing a Kyonko's Room right? Also, for the parallel scene, I was thinking in a image mixing both rooms. The right side being Kyonko's and the left Kyon's.

[CanadaAotS]

In one scene they actually see each other sitting on furniture - Kyon sees Kyonko on a chair, Kyonko sees Kyon on his bed.

I'm pretty sure their rooms are near-identical. This proves the furniture is at the very least.

I don't really see the need to make a whole new room background for Kyonko. Kyon's -should- be the same (at least as far as the background goes).

[Kaisos Erranon]

Fuck yeah, AotS. Now that's progress.

You may have noticed from the anime, but Kyon's room is... near-empty. He has very little of his own things in it. (I suspect he threw most of his stuff out after Sasaki, but...)

All that should really be different is the poster on the wall above the desk, and probably the books... which will probably only appear in CGs, but, due to the events of Day 6, we probably won't ever need to do Kyonko's room in full.

As for a logo... we'll decide that later. Should resemble the original Haruhi logo as much as possible, though. We'll also need a logo for the (fake) eroge-ish OP that plays after Day Zero... did I already mention that?

[Heatth]

In one scene they actually see each other sitting on furniture - Kyon sees Kyonko on a chair, Kyonko sees Kyon on his bed.

I'm pretty sure their rooms are near-identical. This proves the furniture is at the very least.

I don't really see the need to make a whole new room background for Kyonko. Kyon's -should- be the same (at least as far as the background goes).

I think it would be nice if Kyonko's room be a little different from Kyon's. Not to much, but still different.

For the Parallel scene, I know where they appear. But we don't have all fornitures on the image, so Kyon is going to appear on the right side (where is the bed) and Kyonko on the left.

BTW, I am making the appear for just 0.3 second (quite different of how you put on your art direction).

*e*
Fuck yeah, AotS. Now that's progress.

You may have noticed from the anime, but Kyon's room is... near-empty. He has very little of his own things in it. (I suspect he threw most of his stuff out after Sasaki, but...)

All that should really be different is the poster on the wall above the desk, and probably the books... which will probably only appear in CGs, but, due to the events of Day 6, we probably won't ever need to do Kyonko's room in full.

As for a logo... we'll decide that later. Should resemble the original Haruhi logo as much as possible, though. We'll also need a logo for the (fake) eroge-ish OP that plays after Day Zero... did I already mention that?

Too sad none of that things are appearing on the image.

The logo don't need to be decided now. But is nice to be on the check list anyway.

No, you didn't mentioned the (fake) OP here yet. How are we doing then, BTW?

[Ithekro]

Might be something as simple as a color change on the sheets on the bed or a single poster being different.

[Heatth]

Might be something as simple as a color change on the sheets on the bed or a single poster being different.

Yeah, something like that. But, for the parallel scene work as I am thinking, it has to be at last a single difference on each side of the room.

[Kaisos Erranon]

No, you didn't mentioned the (fake) OP here yet. How are we doing then, BTW?

What Danchou and I wanted to do was screw with expectations.

Either after Day Zero or after the first scene with Kyon on Day Zero, we should have an opening reminscent of those typically found in eroge. Similar to the opening Haruhi-chan did, actually. :heh:

After Day Six, we have the REAL opening, which will be... considerably darker and more awesome.

Again, screwing with expectations.

Don't look at me, it's all Kadokawa's fault. >_>

Yeah, something like that. But, for the parallel scene work as I am thinking, it has to be at last a single difference on each side of the room.

...I see what you're getting at. Interesting.

[Joe4evr]

The *KSSSSSSHHH* is already done. It is a TV static isn't it? I did as 5 static images animated (0.13s for each image). I am not entirely satisfied, though.I could make the frames that can be used for the *KSSSSSSHHH* effect, if you want. Makes me feel as if I've done something to contribute to this project.

[Heatth]

What Danchou and I wanted to do was screw with expectations.

Either after Day Zero or after the first scene with Kyon on Day Zero, we should have an opening reminscent of those typically found in eroge. Similar to the opening Haruhi-chan did, actually. :heh:

After Day Six, we have the REAL opening, which will be... considerably darker and more awesome.

Again, screwing with expectations.

Don't look at me, it's all Kadokawa's fault. >_>

I already knew that. Danchou told me by msn. I was asking how we are going to do the OPs :p. (tough you post is usefull for the others)

...I see what you're getting at. Interesting.

Good :D. I think we could just change Kyonko's bed color. But what we could do on the left side? Seeing the image, the bed occupy both sides of the room, so we could make it have two colors on that scene.

(ugh, I am late)

*e*

I could make the frames that can be used for the *KSSSSSSHHH* effect, if you want. Makes me feel as if I've done something to contribute to this project.

I used the frames you can find here (http://www.renpy.org/wiki/renpy/doc/cookbook/Creating_a_TV-static_effect_for_background) (I eddited one of then do supply the missing 3th)

I think they are to thin. Not "noisy" enough. I guess I could do it myself. However, I am not very good with fotoshop, so it would help me if you can do 5 different noisy fremes :D (name then "noise1", "noise2"...). And save then in .png, please.

(ok, now i am going)

[Joe4evr]

I've done a few quick samples, one 100% intensity (http://i241.photobucket.com/albums/ff89/Joe4evr/random/0b6c71fe.png), one 95 (http://i241.photobucket.com/albums/ff89/Joe4evr/random/f37492da.png) and one 90 (http://i241.photobucket.com/albums/ff89/Joe4evr/random/9a2d8a2e.png).

So, what intensity seems best to use?

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

Of course. I can’t have a single moment of true happiness or I lose my soul forever.

Of course, she's perfectly capable of having slightly-less-than true happiness without any ill side effects.

[Jintor]

Goddamnit I wish the SOS Brigade watched more Western stuff.

I've been angling for a place to call them the Scooby Gang for like a week or so now, but there's nowhere it fits!

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

The problem there is that people unfamiliar with the Buffyverse would think it's a reference to the actual Scooby gang...

[dkellis]

I'll be taking over from dkellis it seems. After going through everything, reformatting it all, fixing up small errors, etc. I can truly feel his pain.

Ha. Misery loves company.

Thanks for taking over. I've been trying to cut down on my Random Non-essential Obligations, and the VN archive is one of the more troublesome ones, since it requires access to the Internet (and specifically this forum). With this, I can focus on the Story Archive, which is at least somewhat linear.

[Jintor]

The problem there is that people unfamiliar with the Buffyverse would think it's a reference to the actual Scooby gang...

Then it works as a double reference!

[Heatth]

I've done a few quick samples, one 100% intensity (http://i241.photobucket.com/albums/ff89/Joe4evr/random/0b6c71fe.png), one 95 (http://i241.photobucket.com/albums/ff89/Joe4evr/random/f37492da.png) and one 90 (http://i241.photobucket.com/albums/ff89/Joe4evr/random/9a2d8a2e.png).

So, what intensity seems best to use?

Wait, you did add a black noise on a white screen or the other way? Of that three I would say the 100%. But with a little less black. But just a little.

[Joe4evr]

I did white noise on black, seemed more like TV static than the black on white on the Ren'Py wiki.

[Heatth]

I agree. But I think it will be better with a little more white. To not feel too "dark"(or is just me?).

[Arceon]

Well I sat down to work on sketches today before realizing:

"Hm, I'm probably gonna be wasting my time if I draw these in a completely different style, than the other artists who have already contributed."

Course I would assume we are using the anime's style. Just a little confirmation before I get started on some of these sprites. And, yes I am actually doing something productive after saying I would. It's a miracle aint it?

[Heatth]

Well I sat down to work on sketches today before realizing:

"Hm, I'm probably gonna be wasting my time if I draw these in a completely different style, than the other artists who have already contributed."

Course I would assume we are using the anime's style. Just a little confirmation before I get started on some of these sprites. And, yes I am actually doing something productive after saying I would. It's a miracle aint it?

Yeah, we are going by the anime's style. The 2006 run, I guess.

Only one artist have done anything, actually, so it is no much problem. Here (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=2389504#post2389504) some (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=2393063#post2393063) post (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=2388572#post2388572) with his samples and skecths.

You are going to do the sprites right? So, to not waste anyone time, avoide imouto and otouto. I don't know how far Binjovi did, but I think he was working on them.

[scify]

The problem there is that people unfamiliar with the Buffyverse would think it's a reference to the actual Scooby gang...

I have to admit that was my first thought, though that 's probably because Scooby Doo has been popping up in my life a lot the last few weeks (which is just plain weird.)

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

I assume that means you watch Cartoon Network a lot, as they've been advertising that LA reboot movie for a month or so...

[Nanao-kun]

I assume that means you watch Cartoon Network a lot, as they've been advertising that LA reboot movie for a month or so...

First time I've heard of that. Last show I watched was on the science channel. No wait, make that G4.

I'm glad there appears to be an artist now.

[DJ_RockmanX]

Need moar artists. Can't have enough artists. Especially when the number of them is so low.

[Heatth]

Well, too many artist can make an art dissonance. This can be solved if each one make one thing (one to the sprites, one to backgrounds, one for the desings...) or if they can folow the same style.

However, we can't say we have many. No until then post something to us see. I consider we have only one: Binjovi. Hopefully, soon we will have Selofain, Joe and Arceon. But, as Danchou said, more would be always helpfull.

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

... Damn it, if none of the volunteers actually does anything by the end of the week, I'll be submitting my fail art in their place.

[Heatth]

... Damn it, if none of the volunteers actually does anything by the end of the week, I'll be submitting my fail art in their place.

Nothing is inpeding you to subimit now :p.

Anyway, even if your art is a failure, I bet you can help somehow if you can use photoshop. You don't realy need do draw to color something, or to make a desing.

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

I don't even have photoshop. Never have, actually.

Also, I really don't want to be waving my artwork around if I don't have to. Even if I didn't think it looked horrible, it would make it fairly obvious who I am to anyone who's seen something I've done before. :heh:

[scify]

I assume that means you watch Cartoon Network a lot, as they've been advertising that LA reboot movie for a month or so...

Heh... I haven't touched CN in years... ever since I became a sub-snob (and also realized just how bad the english voice actors tend to be... how I ever survived listening to the original dub of Sailor Moon is beyond me.)

Actually, my girlfriend and I were talking about the movies not too long ago, and I discovered a Valdemar short story collection in which one of the stories was essentially a Scooby Doo episode, down to a talking wolf and the villain saying "If it weren't for you meddling..."

[CanadaAotS]

Ha. Misery loves company.

Thanks for taking over. I've been trying to cut down on my Random Non-essential Obligations, and the VN archive is one of the more troublesome ones, since it requires access to the Internet (and specifically this forum). With this, I can focus on the Story Archive, which is at least somewhat linear.

Yep. Definitely helps that the story archive's pace is quite a bit slower then the VN at the moment. I think otai is working on some rewrites, and Aebliss has his Setsubun, but that's about it.

Honestly, this isn't much of an imposition to me since I'm also working with the VN anyway.

Well I sat down to work on sketches today before realizing:

"Hm, I'm probably gonna be wasting my time if I draw these in a completely different style, than the other artists who have already contributed."

Course I would assume we are using the anime's style. Just a little confirmation before I get started on some of these sprites. And, yes I am actually doing something productive after saying I would. It's a miracle aint it?

Agh, you're touching on the weak spot of my Art Direction. I haven't actually described the sprites (hardly). It'll be awhile before Day Two is done so I'll try to get on that.

But yes, the sprites are in the anime's style.

[otai]

Might be something as simple as a color change on the sheets on the bed or a single poster being different.

Kyonko, being a girl; would be airing out her school uniform. Just draw that hanging on the wall.

[Kaisos Erranon]

Kyonko, being a girl; would be airing out her school uniform. Just draw that hanging on the wall.

...She's still very lazy and unorganized... that doesn't change, really.

[swtrooper42]

Kyon is the type to just leave things till the last possible moment and enjoy every moment beforehand.

If it's not important (or an order) it won't be done.

[otai]

...She's still very lazy and unorganized... that doesn't change, really.

Yes, but allowing herself to smell of sweat and mildew? Either that or she changes uniforms everyday; and washing a uniform everyday is more effort than just hanging it out to air.

[Kaisos Erranon]

Yes, but allowing herself to smell of sweat and mildew? Either that or she changes uniforms everyday; and washing a uniform everyday is more effort than just hanging it out to air.

I always figured she'd have multiple uniforms...

[Heatth]

Isn't normal having multiple uniforms?

Anyway, another thing about the art direction. We realy need that many CG just on the Prologue?It would be awesome, true, but also too much work.

Last time as talked with Danchou about this it was going to be only backgrounds, if I am not misstake. I also had the idea of using screen shots from the anime (exept for the "Green" and for the chessboard). We could also use both backgronds and screen shot for most shots (first a background and then, when the character speeks, the SS).

[CanadaAotS]

Anyway, another thing about the art direction. We realy need that many CG just on the Prologue?It would be awesome, true, but also too much work.

Last time as talked with Danchou about this it was going to be only backgrounds, if I am not misstake. I also had the idea of using screen shots from the anime (exept for the "Green" and for the chessboard). We could also use both backgronds and screen shot for most shots (first a background and then, when the character speeks, the SS).

See, quite a few of those scenes are really easy to make as event cg, because they could be based on anime screenshots. I personally do not like the idea of not drawing everything for the project...

Realize too that a lot of these event CG's won't be much more then a background with a character thrown in. They aren't much more work then making a background itself.

Some of the scenes could be replaced by a background + sprite, but it'd be a lot more visually consistent to just have the the whole prologue be event CG's.

[Heatth]

See, quite a few of those scenes are really easy to make as event cg, because they could be based on anime screenshots. I personally do not like the idea of not drawing everything for the project...

Realize too that a lot of these event CG's won't be much more then a background with a character thrown in. They aren't much more work then making a background itself.

Some of the scenes could be replaced by a background + sprite, but it'd be a lot more visually consistent to just have the the whole prologue be event CG's.

I would love so many CG. The more better. However, I am questioning if we realy need so many on the very start. There are any onther VN that give so many so early?

If I understand Danchou well, the idea was using only backgrounds. The narration pay more atention on them then on the characters anyway. Even if making the CG would be the same work as making the background, the background can be reused latter.

I agree, however, that if we make one scene on CG all must be on CG too. The only exeption could be the GREEN one.

[beanbrew]

Ask the artists. See if they want to do the work. We could also do an updated rerelease if someone adds CGs later or something.

[Arceon]

I usually don't really consider many of those CGs hard to do. I honestly don't mind. Long as I get help.

Also for a small update. Some prelims for Itsuki and Itsuko sprites. I'd normally post a finished product, but Photoshop hates me and my SAI trial ran out, so it may be a bit before I finish coloring. Unless someone else wants to do it.


http://img35.imageshack.us/img35/8867/itsukis.jpg

[Heatth]

Humm... Itsuki is ok, but Itsuko is a bit... strange. The face is the problem, I think. Ah, remember that they are using the summer uniform.

Another problem is that your art is quite different from Binjovi's. Well, I guess Photoshop/SAI can fix it. What is you problem with photoshop, by the way?

Ah, I am working on the script right now. To match with Canada's art direction. If no one post in the between, I will edit this post commenting his direction and saying what I have changed from it(and if I should be more faithfull to him).

[Kaisos Erranon]

I would love so many CG. The more better. However, I am questioning if we realy need so many on the very start. There are any onther VN that give so many so early?

Why do we care what other VNs have done? :heh:

[Heatth]

Why do we care what other VNs have done? :heh:

Good point.



Ok, I changed my script to follow Canada's art directions. It wasn't too different, so it was kinda easy.

However, I desagree in some point that I will post here. I will ultimatly change if the majority/Danchou agree that is better:


Background: Kyon's Kitchen
Since there are no screens from the anime, this can be pretty much any old kitchen.

This scene is a long monologue. So, too fell more "dinamic", I change it. Kyon spend just a little on his kitchen. Then he goes out, in a "Way to School" background (It will be necessery eventually anyway). Then he arrives at school in a “Outside the School” (same as before). He goes to the kitchen after "You know what? Never mind.". To the streets after "…Hilarious." and arrives school after "Nothing special about me whatsoever.".

Continuation of “Poker in a Clubroom”
Background: Clubroom
Sprites: Itsuki
Scene cut to Outside Kitaguchi Station
Background: Outside Kitaguchi Station
Several in-show scenes feature this.
Scene cut to inside the restaurant
Background: Inside the Restaurant
Several in-show scenes feature this.
Sprites: Haruhi
Appears at the start of the scene
Divine Wrath (Ever considered a therapist?)
Continuation of “This isn't a Date!”
Background: Inside the Restaurant
Sprites: Haruhi
Outside Kitaguchi background appears at the line “I must endure”
Background: Outside Kitaguchi Station
*KSSSSSSHHH* CG/Transition/Whatever
Divine Blessing (Fine, I'll try some)
Continuation of “This isn't a Date!”
Background: Inside the Restaurant
Sprites: Haruhi
Outside Kitaguchi background appears at the line “And so...”
Background: Outside Kitaguchi Station
*KSSSSSSHHH* CG/Transition/Whatever

I am not sure what you mean by "Several in-show scenes feature this."
Anyway, I changed the scenes after "I guess I'll head down to the mall by Kitaguchi Station." and "Guess I should go make sure she's not causing trouble for anybody". And only showed Haruhi after "Yo, Haruhi." (I also added a screen shake effect here. Edit: now just Haruhi shake)



Here I didn't understand. When should I change to the Way Home? I put just after "...of course, 'normal' is relative."

Background: Kyon's Room
No change required from Universe 1
Sprites: Kyonko no Otouto
Background: Kyon's Kitchen
No change required from Universe 1
Special Effects: Green text
In this scene the green text should appear as an overlay on the scene (just above the player's textbox. I have a good reason for that placement...) It should appear inbetween two lines, and disappear along with the line after it. ie.
Kyonko “Well, actually, I guess it would be more accurate to say that I’m an ordinary 610-year-old first-year high-school student. “
[After above line has been cleared, the next click, auto-scroll, etc. brings in the floating Green Text line. It should appear before the next line starts]
Green Text “Seen this before... boring!”
[The Green text line stays on the screen for the upcoming line]
Kyonko “I’m not lying. I just spent the last 594 years of my life in a perpetual time loop comprised of the last two weeks of August.”
[The Green text disappears along with the previous line]
A “typed out” effect, where letters appear in-order individually would work well for later scenes that have multiple lines.
End of Morning- Another End, Another Eight

Same issue as the equivalent scene. I am assuming that her room is different from Kyon's, as discussed. I haven't changed the green text yet, however (in any scene). Too troblesome. I may take an intire day to do it so I will not work on it today.

Continuation of “Poker in a Clubroom”
Background: Clubroom
Sprites: Itsuko
“She and I go our seperate ways...” Itsuko's sprite disappears. Cut to Outside Old School Building.
Background: Outside Old School Building
Right after the green text “Very important things” scene cut to Outside Kitaguchi Station.
Background: Outside Kitaguchi Station
Same as Universe 1.
Scene cut to inside the restaurant
Background: Inside the Restaurant
Same as Universe 1.
Sprites: Haruki
Appears at the start of the scene
Outside Kitaguchi background appears at the line “And so...”
Background: Outside Kitaguchi Station
Sprites: Haruki
Appears at “After we finished eating...”
*KSSSSSSHHH* CG/Transition/Whatever

I only showed Haruki when he speaks here.

Continuation of “Poker in a Clubroom”
Background: Clubroom
Sprites: Itsuko
“Leaving Itsuko chuckling to herself...” Itsuko's sprite disappears.
Scene cut to Outside Old School Building
Background: Outside Old School Building
Right after “I just want a little brother...” scene cut to Asahina's Classroom
Background: Asahina's Classroom
Same as Universe 1.
Sprites: Mitsuuru
Appears with background.
Special Effect: Screen shake
Cue at -----KRRRRRSSHHHHHHHCCCKKK---. Screen shake just seemed fitting for the sound effect, and the transition to the green text rant.
Special Effect: Green tint
Cue right after the screen shake. Whole screen, including player chatbox, background, Mitsuuru's sprite, etc. become tinted in green. Great effect for the upcoming green text rant.
Special Effect: Green text
Everything mentioned back when Kyonko was introducing the other brigade members applies here.
“Well, it's not really my business...” after the green text is finished is the cue for the green tint to turn off as well as a scene cut to Kyonko walking home.
Background: On the Way Home
Sprites: Mitsuuru
Mitsuuru appears. “Mitsuuru: Bye, Kyon-chan! See you tomorrow!”
Mitsuuru disappears.
*KSSSSSSHHH* CG/Transition/Whatever

For the greentext rant I was going with the TV static. Your idea might be good, but, eh, what is "tint"? :heh:

My Room- Oyasumi
Background: Kyon's Room
Not much else to say about this scene. Nice green text in Universe 1, huhuhu...
End of My Room- Oyasumi

Our Room- Parallel Connection
Background: Kyon's Room
Sprites: Kyon, Kyonko
Sprites appear just before this line: “Kyon: Huh? - Kyonko: Eh?” And disappear right after. Nice one-liner where they both see each other for a split second.
Special Effects: Dual Text
Alright, so the suggestion I have here for this scene... I don't know if it's possible with Ren'py. Two player textboxes. If we have one at the top narrating Kyonko's lines, and one at the bottom narrating Kyon's lines, it would totally work out.
If this is impossible, another option is displaying two lines at once in the normal chatbox. The text would have to be formatted of course so exactly two lines worth of each character's text can fit in at once. This option would be a lot easier to code then the former, I'm sure... lol.
End of Our Room- Parallel Connection

The "Our Room- Parallel Connection" is the only scene of Day 0 I haven't done yet. This is because the dual text is kinda hard and I didn't know how to do. Anyway, I will not change much here. However, when the kyons appear, it will be just for 0.3 seconds, just before the "Huh?" and "Eh?"

For the Prologue, dispite our previous discussion, I will not change anything. For the code, it don't matter what image will appear, but when. My version is the same as your's. It will end with an animation of all previous images looping until you end the scene.

We haven't done the Day One yet. As I said, the greentext is incomplete for now. The same goes for the TV effects, I am still waiting for the images. (Joe? Where are you :p)

Oh, I have a new image request. This game is going to have a "Skip Scene" feature, just like Fate/Stay Night. I need a background for when we ask the player if he want to skip it. This could also be used as background for the menus (I am not in hurry with this one. It is best wait for the menu desings).

Well, that is it. Your directions are very helpfull, Canada. It might be a good idea you donwload the Renpy. So you could actually see how is going. You could, then, extend you art direction for the scene transition (is hard explain them by fórum).

*e*
Oh, I have forgot to ask. In the parallel scene, you said about two text box, one above the other. What I have discussed with danchou, however, was using the same box but with the two lines being displayed at same time. Whith one is better?

[Sherby~]

I'm thinking about giving the sprites a shot.

But first, what kinds of expressions do you need from each of the sprites? It'd be helpful to know since most VNs tend to have sprites with changing facial expressions or postures.

[Kaisos Erranon]

But first, what kinds of expressions do you need from each of the sprites? It'd be helpful to know since most VNs tend to have sprites with changing facial expressions or postures.

Lots.

Don't ask me, I'm just the writer.

AotS has a list of needed sprites, I'm pretty sure.

Personally, I think we should have one of Kyonko blushing, since she's so prone to it and all.


Anyway.

The Way of the Nanpa

Kyonko: …Itsuko…

Itsuko: Hmm?


She turns around, and when she sees me half-bent over in pain, clutching my head, her usual carefully practiced expression changes to one of shock and concern.


Itsuko: A-Are you alright? What’s wrong?

Kyonko: It happened again… the ripples…


The pain, and the noise, is subsiding. I’m fine now, but…


Kyonko: Itsuko, you didn’t notice anything?

Itsuko: Well, no, but I… give me a minute, please.


Itsuko stands up straight, closes her eyes, and appears to focus for a few seconds. What is she doing?

Suddenly, she opens her eyes, her expression of shock returning.


Itsuko: …I can no longer feel him.


Him?


Itsuko: My empathic link with Haruki Suzumiya has been severed.

Kyonko: Severed!?

Itsuko: In its place, I can feel a different presence. However, I cannot get any sort of reading…


Wait, wait. Weren’t we supposed to have stopped existing, or something? This looks just like the normal school, but… Where the hell are we!?

Haaaaaaaahahahahahahahahaha!

At that moment, the voices of two people, arguing, reach my ears.


Boy A: So, tell me. Why do we have to spend our lunch hour looking for girls? In the school?

Boy B: Because, don’t you know? North High has the highest pretty-ugly ratio in the whole city. If we look around, we’re bound to find someone who is both hot and willing.

Boy A: Haven’t you memorized the name and face of everyone worth dating in first year?

Boy B: Could be some new transfer students I don’t know about. You never know.

Boy A: You’re starting to sound suspiciously familiar.


The owners of the voices rounded the corner behind us.


Boy B: Huh? Why? Look, there’s some right now.

Boy A: Wha—


Two boys had rounded the corner. One of them, taller than the other and rather sleazy-looking, was grinning widely, looking us up and down. The other, who looks a little like Asahina-senpai, was gazing, wide-mouthed, at… Itsuko.


Boy B: Watch this.


He said in a whisper he thought I couldn’t hear.


Boy B: Hey there! Fancy meeting you here. Must be, uh, fate, huh?


Itsuko and I look at each other. Who would have expected this, all of a sudden?


Itsuko: …I will deal with this.

Kyonko: …You sure?


Itsuko addressed the sleazy one.


Itsuko: What is it you, ah, require, exactly?

Boy B: We just wanna talk. Uh, um, tot too often you see two people just hanging out in a hallway with nothing to do, ya know?


What kind of school do you go to!?


Itsuko: How unfortunate. My friend and me were just about to—

Boy B: Aw, come on, don’t be like that. Tell us your names. I’m Taniguchi!


The other boy had apparently gotten over his shock, and was right behind the sleazy boy. He looks… rather excited.


Boy A: I’m Kunikida!


…Odd. They have the same names as…


Itsuko: Ah, no, we’re really very—

Taniguchi: You’re new here, right? Where are you from, anyway?

Kunikida: At least let us show you around the school!

Itsuko: Ah, er, no, I…

Taniguchi: Right? Come along with us, we can show you and your friend, uh, the library and stuff.


Itsuko is getting overwhelmed by their enthusiasm. It wouldn’t be a good thing if she agreed to go with them just to shut them up.

Knowing I was probably going to regret this, I stepped in front of Itsuko as though to protect her.


Kyonko: Since you’re so curious… Her name is Yamada. I’m Komada. We’re from Canada.

Taniguchi: …Excuse us.


The two of them turned away and started whispering loudly.


Kunikida: She’s obviously lying. …Maybe we should just ignore her and go for the other one?

Taniguchi: No man, they’re both A-rank, at least. We can’t let this chance slip away from us.

Kunikida: So, then…

Taniguchi: Let’s rethink the attack plan.


They turn back to me, who is currently grinding the palm of my hand into my forehead.


Taniguchi: So, uh, if you’re from Canada, that means you don’t know much Japanese, right? Why don’t we teach you.


The boy called Kunikida nods in support.


Kyonko: Actually, we only speak Swedish. Sorry. I can’t understand you.


I said in Japanese.


Kunikida: Tough nut to crack, huh?

Taniguchi: Don’t worry. I’ll think of something.


I can hear you two perfectly!


Taniguchi: So what do you think about—


Ah, geez! This is stupid! I can believe you two haven’t given up yet! How discourteous can you be?

I’ll just have to…


[DECISION POINT HERE]

1) Give the two of them a rating.
2) Tell them politely that we’re leaving.
3) Tell them to go the hell away.


D Rank


Kyonko: You know. I have a friend who gives guys ratings based on their attractiveness.

Taniguchi: Really? What a coincidence! I do the same for girls, and I gotta say, you both are—


I cut him off.


Kyonko: And I’ve gotten pretty good at rating guys myself. Let’s see, you both are…


I pretended to think while looking at them up and down.


Kyonko: D rank.

Taniguchi: Eh? But, but, why?

Kyonko: Well, first, you aren’t very good-looking. Second, you’re way too forward and pushy. Normally, each one would only drop you one rank, but together, they drop you three. Next, your friend there. Although he’s kind of cute, he’s been drooling over Yamada here since he first saw her. Definitely no go. So, bye.

Kunikida: Wait, no, we’re not finished—

Kyonko: Come on.


I said to Yama—er, Itsuko.


Kyonko: We’ll be late for the meeting.


We left them there, dumbstruck, staring at our backs. That felt surprisingly good.


Itsuko: Thank you for that. I don’t know what—

Kyonko: More importantly, you’re that bad at dealing with pushy guys? I figured you’d be a natural at it.

Itsuko: I am more surprised you did so well, considering how you usually perform around Suzumiya-san.

Kyonko: …Geh, that’s something completely different.

Itsuko: Is it now?

Kyonko: Yeah, it

Ripple.

Oh no not again.

My head is racked with pain as the ripples assault my mind

Alt.

Function Four.

The two return to their own world, feeling secure.

Secure feeling world own their to return, two the.

The world is mirrored.

Mirrored is world the.

It’s enough to make you laugh

Right?

Kyonko: AGGGGHHHHHHHH!!!!

*ZZZZZZZT*


The Persistent Water Flea


Kyonko: Ugh… We’re kind of busy, so we’ll be going now…


I grab Itsuko’s arm and try to pull her down the corridor, but the one called Taniguchi blocks our path.


Taniguchi: Hey, wait, what’s the rush, we’re not that scary, are we?


Immediately, I turn around, intending to go the other way, but…


Kunikida: Y-yeah! All we wanna do is talk, so…


…Is this the Dimension of Perverts or something!?

I immediately made a decision, and, still pulling Itsuko, charged the one called Kunikida.


Kunikida: Whoa!

He sidestepped, and fell flat on his ass.


While running in the opposite direction, I heard:


Taniguchi: Dumbass! Get up and chase after them!

Kunikida: Are you nuts? I’m not getting caught chasing after girls in a school hallway! We’ll get arrested!


I stop running, in order to catch my breath.


Itsuko: …I think you could have handled that a little better.

Kyonko: Shut up. It’s not like you did any

Ripple.

Oh no not again.

My head is racked with pain as the ripples assault my mind

Alt.

Function Four.

The two return to their own world, feeling secure.

Secure feeling world own their to return, two the.

The world is mirrored.

Mirrored is world the.

It’s enough to make you laugh

Right?!

Kyonko: AGGGGHHHHHHHH!!!!

*ZZZZZZT*


Rejected/Dejected


Kyonko: Look. We’re not interested at all nor are we asking for your attention. Go away.

Taniguchi: But—

Kyonko: This is our spot. Go away, please.

Taniguchi: Alright, fair enough. If you’re ever in the mood, I could give you my phone num—

Kyonko: No.



So, sighing, the boy called Taniguchi turns to leave, grabbing the upper arm of his friend, who still seems to be rather distracted.

As we watched them leave, Itsuko turned to me.


Itsuko: You handled that very well. You have my thanks.

Kyonko: No, it’s fine. Wasn’t any trouble at all to get rid of a few pests. More importantly, I’m surprised you’re that bad at dealing with guys like that. I thought you’d


…


Itsuko: …What’s wrong? Is it…?


I hear it again. A ripple.

No, no, no, no, not again it hurts god no

Alt.

Function Four.

The two return to their own world, feeling secure.

Secure feeling world own their to return, two the.

The world is mirrored.

Mirrored is world the.

It’s enough to make you laugh

Right?!

HAHAHAHAHAHAHA

Kyonko: AGGGGHHHHHHHH!!!!

*ZZZZZZT*



Despite the fact that I think this is the worst thing I've done in a while, I had fun writing it.

Please comment and enjoy. More later.

Edit: Yes, the flowchart is in error. The Itsuko point should be moved from Water Flea to D Rank.

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

D Rank


Kyonko: You know. I have a friend who gives guys ratings based on their attractiveness.

Taniguchi: Really? What a coincidence! I do the same for girls, and I gotta say, you both are—


I cut him off.


Kyonko: And I’ve gotten pretty good at rating guys myself. Let’s see, you both are…


I pretended to think while looking at them up and down.


Kyonko: D rank.

Taniguchi: Eh? But, but, why?

Kyonko: Well, first, you aren’t very good-looking. Second, you’re way too forward and pushy. Normally, each one would only drop you one rank, but together, they drop you three. Next, your friend there. Although he’s kind of cute, he’s been drooling over Yamada here since he first saw her. Definitely no go. So, bye.

Kunikida: Wait, no, we’re not finished—

Kyonko: Come on.


I said to Yama—er, Itsuko.


Kyonko: We’ll be late for the meeting.


We left them there, dumbstruck, staring at our backs. That felt surprisingly good.

GAAAAAAAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!

So. Freaking. AWESOME!! :heh:

[Roger Rambo]

I personally never got the impression that Kunikida was as pushy as depicted here. Extremely funny though.

(LOL At Kyonko being A rank)

[Kaisos Erranon]

I personally never got the impression that Kunikida was as pushy as depicted here.

Yes, I know.

I apologize. If you can suggest anything else, I'd be glad to hear it.

I just can't write Kunikida worth a damn, since he's SUCH a nonentity.


(LOL At Kyonko being A rank)

She is! She's adorable.

[Roger Rambo]

Yes, I know.

I apologize. If you can suggest anything else, I'd be glad to hear it.

I just can't write Kunikida worth a damn, since he's SUCH a nonentity.
I dunno. Keep him as a nonentity? Most of the time he stays politely detached from most things.



Didn't Yuki only get a B rank? What was the difference?