View Full Version : The Genderbending of Haruhi Suzumiya [Spoilers Aplenty]
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Also, as much I like the "kill the main character every time he screws up" style, I suggest having a "go to where you screwd up" option in the Game Over screen. Even with the skip scene feature, it is a pain have to play all the way back if you forgot to save.
I doubt this was actually a "kill the main character because he screwed up" moment. Mostly because if Itsuko had killed Kyon, he would have been dead before the sound of the gunshot had a chance to ring in his ears. Either the shot went somewhere else or she didn't shoot and the sound came from elsewhere.
Of course, it could just be artistic license. Or that the Kiss of Death fires at subsonic speed (I was unable to find any information on its firing speed).
I doubt this was actually a "kill the main character because he screwed up" moment. Mostly because if Itsuko had killed Kyon, he would have been dead before the sound of the gunshot had a chance to ring in his ears. Either the shot went somewhere else or she didn't shoot and the sound came from elsewhere.
Of course, it could just be artistic license. Or that the Kiss of Death fires at subsonic speed (I was unable to find any information on its firing speed).
Ah, shut up. :p How the hell he would describe it then? It is all from the Kyon perspective, so Kaisos have to tell the reader Kyon died somehow. :heh:
I am not sure it is really a Bad End, tough. If so Kaisos need to edit some scenes and add some variable somewhere. The way it is now is like punishing the player for going to Itsuko's route (Do you want to get the hot girl? Too bad!). There is also the need to get her route somehow. :heh:
Still, he said he had a new idea for her route last page, and that he might go edit some past scenes to reflect it. So it is not impossible. I just think it would be awesome a shocking death now.
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The fact Kaisos hadn't say anything yet and didn't posted a word beside the scene is also very suspicious. It is like he is enjoying the reaction before explaning something. :p
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I wonder how many references I can make in a single post. I try whenever I have the time and care to put the effort in. Or somebody else can try.
I've missed it. What are you talking about?
Iaevuous
2010-01-12, 00:07
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The fact Kaisos hadn't say anything yet and didn't posted a word beside the scene is also very suspicious. It is like he is enjoying the reaction before explaning something. :p
Maybe he wants time for theories to flourish. He can't joss what's not there.
Ah, shut up. :p How the hell he would describe it then? It is all from the Kyon perspective, so Kaisos have to tell the reader Kyon died somehow. :heh:
"And then I died."
or
"And th-"
or
"In hindsight, it was a bad idea to try to call her bluff, seeing as it wasn't a bluff. Which means that you're communicating with the dead right now. Did you know that you could do that? Haruhi would definitely recruit you if she found out."
But yeah, artistic license.
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The fact Kaisos hadn't say anything yet and didn't posted a word beside the scene is also very suspicious. It is like he is enjoying the reaction before explaning something. :p
Very true.
dragon4dudes
2010-01-12, 00:23
It's not like the gunshots actually had to be from the Kiss of Death. As Sute said, there is the possibility that it came from somewhere else. This scene would make an interesting bad end. Stupid cliffhangers, leaving me to want more. I hate being Cliff Hanger, hanging from a cliff (Kudos to you if you understand that reference. I feel like a moron simply posting it.).
I doubt Kyon's death here simply because Itsuko should know the implications of his death by now. I think there was more I wanted to say, but now I forget.
swtrooper42
2010-01-12, 00:29
Ah, shut up. :p How the hell he would describe it then? It is all from the Kyon perspective, so Kaisos have to tell the reader Kyon died somehow. :heh:
Tiger Dojo? I would totally write that.
CLIFF HANGER, HANGING FROM A CLIFF! AND THAT'S WHY HE'S CALLED CLIFF HANGER!
Can't...hold....on....much....longer!
I loved that show.
CrowKenobi
2010-01-12, 00:29
I like the first bit, and between bouts of laughter, I kept wondering how Itsuko kept herself from bursting out laughing during their "walk..." then the serious part... :uhoh:
I don't think the gun is really necessary, threatening Kyon's "family jewels" would be more than enough... :meh:
Though I wish Itsuko would use a non-violent way to inquire about the headphones, bad-end or no... don't want Kyon intimidated by her later on (more than Haruhi, anyway :p).
Iaevuous
2010-01-12, 00:31
It's not like the gunshots actually had to be from the Kiss of Death. As Sute said, there is the possibility that it came from somewhere else. This scene would make an interesting bad end. Stupid cliffhangers, leaving me to want more. I hate being Cliff Hanger, hanging from a cliff (Kudos to you if you understand that reference. I feel like a moron simply posting it.)
CLIFF HANGER, HANGING FROM A CLIFF! AND THAT'S WHY HE'S CALLED CLIFF HANGER!
I also doubt his death. When you only have one guy you suspect to have information, it's not a good idea to kill him.
If the gun were pointed at his chin, wouldn't he needed to move it to close the distance? Perhaps the shot was at the side of his face went off and didn't hit anything.
Or maybe it's not a firearm at all. Not sure how you'd sneak one into Japan.
"And then I died."
or
"And th-"
or
"In hindsight, it was a bad idea to try to call her bluff, seeing as it wasn't a bluff. Which means that you're communicating with the dead right now. Did you know that you could do that? Haruhi would definitely recruit you if she found out."
But yeah, artistic license.
The first suggestion is pretty lame. :heh: The last one is hilarious. Anyway, yeah, artistic license would be more likely. However, I am not sure, but wouldn't be a bullet slower then sound?
It's not like the gunshots actually had to be from the Kiss of Death. As Sute said, there is the possibility that it came from somewhere else. This scene would make an interesting bad end. Stupid cliffhangers, leaving me to want more. I hate being Cliff Hanger, hanging from a cliff (Kudos to you if you understand that reference. I feel like a moron simply posting it.).
I doubt Kyon's death here simply because Itsuko should know the implications of his death by now. I think there was more I wanted to say, but now I forget.
Ok, now things are confusing. You are suggesting someone else fired at them? Who? Why? :heh:
For why Itsuko fired. You must first remember there is no way to Itsuko know for sure it is not all an elaborated trap from an enemy of the Organization. I mean, they are the guys dealing with God. The only way for then not having tons of enemies is keeping secrecy, but what if someone discovered? Also, She has no way to know if any other supernatural party exist. Or maybe even Yuuki's party may have allied with the "enemy". We also know that the organization has at last one group who don't like then (but their goals are similar).
That being said, the "Kyon" of the "new world" is wearing Haruki's headphones. Why? This don't make any sense or whatever. Definitivelly suspicious. I can understand why she was so... agressive.
Of courese, there is no reason for actually firing. Bluffing is good, firing is not. For her, killing "Kyon" here is a problem in every possibility. For once she would have to deal with the police, she also would have to fight, maybe alone, with more enemies agents. Also, if he do eding up being a "Kyon of another world" (which is the case, as we know ^^;) this might resulting with the end of this world (a big problem, considering she is stuck there now :heh:).
For taht reason, I would say the shoot was an accident. Guns are dangerous thing, and you can ending up screwing with then in the worse momment (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/IJustShotMarvinInTheFace). She is, after all, very young, it is not that surprising having her commiting such dumb mistake in a momment of tension.
Anyway, yeah, cliffhanger sucks. Trolling authors are even worse. :p
In a completelly unrelated side note, is my new signature appearing? It is normal I don't seeing it?
Tiger Dojo? I would totally write that.
If this actually has "Dead Ends" as opposed to just "Bad Ends", we totally need a Tiger Dojo.
dragon4dudes
2010-01-12, 00:45
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If the above references aren't obvious.... :eyebrow:
I have a feeling that the gun was pressed against his chin rather than simply pointed. That way, even if Kyon's head did move, it would still be pressed against the chin. Of course that doesn't account for slipping, or Itsuko being freakishly surprised that Kyon even kissed her, I believe.
@Heatth, it could be a coincidence that maybe a gun was fired elsewhere. The point was that crap would happen if Kyon was killed and would happen to Kyon's murderer.
And your new sig? I don't know what your old sig looked like to make an accurate judgment. But I do think it looks different if that's of any help.
I also doubt his death. When you only have one guy you suspect to have information, it's not a good idea to kill him.
If the gun were pointed at his chin, wouldn't he needed to move it to close the distance? Perhaps the shot was at the side of his face went off and didn't hit anything.
Or maybe it's not a firearm at all. Not sure how you'd sneak one into Japan.
I also actually doubt the death. I ust find it would be awesome so I keep assuming it is the case.I am just being optimistic. :)
About how to sneak a firearm in Japan. Surelly it is harder then in US. However, it is a hidden one, in a lip stick. And Itsuko is member of a very fishy secret Organization. Not surprising she being able to have one. Btw, I suspect the "teatcher" she talks about is Mori.
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Didn't the Tamaro brothers have guns in Intrigues? Sure, they were disguissed as policemen, but it proves the Organization have guns.
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Oh, my sig just appeared. Weird.
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I am pretty sure we are going to have a Tiger Dojo of sorts. Last time I heared something about it Kaisos and Danchou were still discussing who would actually be in there.
dragon4dudes
2010-01-12, 00:52
Their day job could be as policemen. I wouldn't doubt it if the Organization had the state of the art weaponry and technology.
@Heatth, it could be a coincidence that maybe a gun was fired elsewhere. The point was that crap would happen if Kyon was killed and would happen to Kyon's murderer.
And your new sig? I don't know what your old sig looked like to make an accurate judgment. But I do think it looks different if that's of any help.
A gun fired elsewhere in Japan is still very filshy, you know. :heh: Specially considering the same gun don't seen to be fired in Mikuru's scene.
About my new sig, of course it looks different, I hadn't any before. :p It wasn't appearing for some reason but I can see it now, thanks.
Their day job could be as policemen. I wouldn't doubt it if the Organization had the state of the art weaponry and technology.
Eh, I guess they could actually be policemen. But beliving on this would be the same as thinking Mori is actually a maid and Arakawa a buttler and a taxi cab. :heh:
Anyway, I don't understand you last sentence. You are agreeing or disagreeing the Organization might have access to some weapon?
However, I am not sure, but wouldn't be a bullet slower then sound?
It really depends. A lot of modern bullets are supersonic (a big part of what you hear when a gun is fired is a sonic boom), but subsonic bullets do exist. The Kiss of Death being a secret weapon makes more inclined than normal to believe it could have a subsonic bullet, but...
Anyways, it's also possible that Kyon made a mistake. Sure, he said 'distinctive' but he is in Japan. He probably hasn't heard an actual gunshot before.
Then again, if Haruki's headphones got near Kyon's ears in the struggle, it could be part of a vision/hallucination.
That Kiss of Death was used during the Cold War. By "modern bullets" you certanly mean something more modern then that right? Of course, it could be a speciall verion made recently, but what would be the point? This kind of wepon would nly be used at point blank range anyway, so anything is good.
For the "distinctive", I guess he was talking about the sound guns do in movies. I know it is not the same sound, but chances are Kaisos just don't care. :p
The hallucination theorie seens to be the most likely to me. The phones don't really need to be in Kyon's ear to make him hallucinate. The problem is, why a gunshot? When would Haruki hae the chance to hear one? A movie? That would be kinda lame, unless it is plot related. Maybe it was a action movie that inspirated him to make the movie in Sighs?
Itsuko being freakishly surprised that Kyon even kissed her, I believe.
Aw it didn't happen OTL
@Heatth: Forgot one other thing.... the sprites...
In the end of the development... Kyon may get kissed by all of the girls... (Tsuruya-san, done.... Itsuko: almost, Kyonko: none yet, Mikuru, Yuki and Haruhi: nope
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-12, 05:30
I'm sure if the writers of the various routes had their way, he'd make it a lot farther than that. :heh:
Roger Rambo
2010-01-12, 08:08
It really depends. A lot of modern bullets are supersonic (a big part of what you hear when a gun is fired is a sonic boom), but subsonic bullets do exist. The Kiss of Death being a secret weapon makes more inclined than normal to believe it could have a subsonic bullet, but...
All the same, even subsonic rounds fired from this range don't take very long to get to the brain. So I'd imagine you'd still be dead before you could recognize the sound of the gunshot and if you were going to perceive anything, it'd be the 4.5mm tunnel forming in your mouth.
So this next scene very well may open up with Itsuko helplessly fumbling about as Kyon forcibly kisses...that seems to happen to allot of lady spy's, no doesn't it?
In the end of the development... Kyon may get kissed by all of the girls... (Tsuruya-san, done.... Itsuko: almost, Kyonko: none yet, Mikuru, Yuki and Haruhi: nope
Wait, Kyon kisses Tsuraya?!
Damn I gotta see the CG for THAT!
Wait, Kyon kisses Tsuraya?!
Damn I gotta see the CG for THAT!
Somewhere in the paths in the VN, before Kyon can leave... Tsuruya-san got him.
Kissing Asakura is a nightmare for both of the Kyons (especially when both have weapons).
Itsuko kissing Kyon is better :heh:
Roger Rambo
2010-01-12, 10:15
Itsuko kissing Kyon is better :heh:
Even when Itsuko is threatening him with a weapon? :p
Even when Itsuko is threatening him with a weapon? :p
lol it's the Kiss of Death after all (Will Kyon get kissed and have his very own souvenir: a hole through his head? STAY TUNED!)
Not sure how I feel about the gun.... I'm going back and forth on how bystanders would react to the sound of a gunshot. On the one hand, it's a not a quiet occurrence, even with something as small as a 4.5mm round. On the other, this isn't a sound most people in Japan would be terribly familiar with (outside of movies and games, where the sound effects are usually wrong), and a 4.5mm is (relatively) quiet enough that I could see it being mistaken for a car backfiring.
The other question is what would Itsuko be planning to do with the body afterwards? Not to mention the blood spray... and the fact that shooting someone with a smalll round through the chin may not immediately kill them, unless it ricochets into their brain stem.
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The fact Kaisos hadn't say anything yet and didn't posted a word beside the scene is also very suspicious. It is like he is enjoying the reaction before explaning something. :p
That's rather par for the course.
Then again, if Haruki's headphones got near Kyon's ears in the struggle, it could be part of a vision/hallucination.
This is what I figured happened. It was buzzing a lot just up to that point, after all.
@Heatth: Forgot one other thing.... the sprites...
Sorry, what do you mean? Why was it directed to me?
Not sure how I feel about the gun.... I'm going back and forth on how bystanders would react to the sound of a gunshot. On the one hand, it's a not a quiet occurrence, even with something as small as a 4.5mm round. On the other, this isn't a sound most people in Japan would be terribly familiar with (outside of movies and games, where the sound effects are usually wrong), and a 4.5mm is (relatively) quiet enough that I could see it being mistaken for a car backfiring.
They are in a park, however. I suppose the sound would stand out anyway.
The other question is what would Itsuko be planning to do with the body afterwards? Not to mention the blood spray... and the fact that shooting someone with a smalll round through the chin may not immediately kill them, unless it ricochets into their brain stem.
That is why I think it is a bluff. At most, the firing was accidental.
That's rather par for the course.
Specially because he already posted in another thread, but completelly ignored that one. This bastard. :p
This is what I figured happened. It was buzzing a lot just up to that point, after all.
I believe he ear that buzz even when not wearing then. I believe it is when he goes in GAR mode he start to hear them. Like when he jumped at the train in Haruhi's route or at the river in Mikuru's route (who goes GAR mode in Yuki's route was Yuki herself, tough).
Also, if it was an hallucination, he was was hallucination what? He just remember scenes from (Haruki's) past. When the hell wpuld have Haruki heared a gunshoot? I could understand Itsuko, but not Haruki.
Also, if it was an hallucination, he was was hallucination what? He just remember scenes from (Haruki's) past. When the hell wpuld have Haruki heared a gunshoot? I could understand Itsuko, but not Haruki.
When has Haruki seen Mikuru's face melt, with Mitsuruu shouting "SURPRISE" afterwards? I'm pretty sure Haruki experiencing something isn't a requirement.
Itsuko was probably only using a regular tube of lipstick. If that scene even occured at all. If it's a hallucination, at what point does it begin?
I'd also like to mention that this is some of the best writing so far Kaisos. It's got me on edge, at least. I almost wonder if Kyon should make a reference to Asakura though. It seems Kyon meets a lot of beautiful women... and then they try to kill him... :heh:
When has Haruki seen Mikuru's face melt, with Mitsuruu shouting "SURPRISE" afterwards? I'm pretty sure Haruki experiencing something isn't a requirement.
Well, it aways start as memories. Even if it get distorced soon.
Itsuko was probably only using a regular tube of lipstick. If that scene even occured at all. If it's a hallucination, at what point does it begin?
I'd also like to mention that this is some of the best writing so far Kaisos. It's got me on edge, at least. I almost wonder if Kyon should make a reference to Asakura though. It seems Kyon meets a lot of beautiful women... and then they try to kill him... :heh:
I doubt the scene itself was an hallucination, at most the final gunshoot.
The point is that scene don't look nothing with the previous hallucination, so is kinda strange if it really is one. What is similar to the previous scene, however, is Kyon reckless behavior in the end. He act like that in both Haruhi's and Mikuru's scene. In Yuki's scene, who acts like that is Yuki, tough (but it make sense, when you learn the headphone effect her in a different way).
The conparation with Ryouko was very good, anyway. Kyon is really unlucky, every time a beautiful girl seens to want to go out with him she attempt to kill him insted. :heh:
They are in a park, however. I suppose the sound would stand out anyway.
Maybe, maybe not. City parks aren't terribly large, especially in a country where space is at a premium.
Maybe, maybe not. City parks aren't terribly large, especially in a country where space is at a premium.
It was the same one from episode 3/5 right? Where Mikuru tells Kyon her true nature. If so, it seens to be a pretty large park. And a quietful one too.
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Besides, in any event, Haruhi was nearby. She most certanly would go back to check. And this would be a problem, regardless if she find Kyon dead, injuried or just on the arms of a unknown girl. :heh:
Magnificate
2010-01-12, 15:46
Dead? Not likely, we are still too early in the narrative to be that drastic.
Injured? Perhaps, as a setup for a hospital scene.
Hallucination? Perhaps, the headphones are the obvious source. Still, that resolution would seem bland in comparison to other options. ;)
Anyway, quite a nice read. BTW, I wonder how the situation would play out if the genders were reversed, as in Itsuki trying to seduce Kyonko. That would certainly be a hilarious scene.
worldruined
2010-01-12, 16:21
Dead? Not likely, we are still too early in the narrative to be that drastic.
Injured? Perhaps, as a setup for a hospital scene.
Hallucination? Perhaps, the headphones are the obvious source. Still, that resolution would seem bland in comparison to other options. ;)
Tranqed, as a setup for dual-Koizumi action...
dragon4dudes
2010-01-12, 20:47
Eh, I guess they could actually be policemen. But beliving on this would be the same as thinking Mori is actually a maid and Arakawa a buttler and a taxi cab. :heh:
Anyway, I don't understand you last sentence. You are agreeing or disagreeing the Organization might have access to some weapon?
I guess what I was trying to say is if the Organization is capable of somehow procuring a multimillion-billion dollar mansion on a private island, getting state of the art technology shouldn't be too much of a problem. In fact they could be working as an undercover international agency or something....
Iaevuous
2010-01-12, 21:19
In fact they could be working as an undercover international agency or something....
If Closed Space does indeed occur all over the world, that would probably be a necessity. That makes me wonder about the total number of espers in the world, though.
Sorry, what do you mean? Why was it directed to me?
I just got the message: no sprites in vn
I just got the message: no sprites in vn
Uhh... lolwut?
I can't find your sprite sheet...
I guess what I was trying to say is if the Organization is capable of somehow procuring a multimillion-billion dollar mansion on a private island, getting state of the art technology shouldn't be too much of a problem. In fact they could be working as an undercover international agency or something....
That is true. However, this would also mean it shouldn't be too much of a problem they habing gunweapons right? My point stands.
If Closed Space does indeed occur all over the world, that would probably be a necessity. That makes me wonder about the total number of espers in the world, though.
It does occur all over the world? Have someone ever stated that? It wouldn't be strange if it only occur on Japan, or even only on Kansai. I also remember Itsuki saying there wasn't more then 10 ESPers, but he could be refering to the ones nearby.
I just got the message: no sprites in vn
I can't find your sprite sheet...
Errr, I are saying there is no sprite posted here in the thread right? If so, yeah. There is a few, but not a big number. But what was your point?
I lost the sprites Binjovi made for the VN :heh:
I lost the sprites Binjovi made for the VN :heh:
No (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2389555&postcount=15385), you (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2390115&postcount=15406) did (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2401233&postcount=15689) not (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2715974&postcount=20703).
Well, I doubt it could be called a 'sprite sheet', but they are sprites neverthless.
Also, you do realize Binjovi don't post every thing he does her, right?
Anyway, what are you saying? I completely missed what your point was supposed to be.
I can't find your sprite sheet...
That's 'cause there isn't one. The VN will be making use of individual images; not any kind of sheet. At least that has been my assumption. If that is not the case, then it won't be too hard to compile what I have into one. On top of that, I'm not sure I'll be releasing all of what I do to the public. Some things need to remain hush hush as they may potentially give away information about the story.
Aw dang. Beat by Heatth. Gotta hand it to you, man. You're on top of things. :D
My mistake this isn't yours:
http://i62.photobucket.com/albums/h109/51793Moeman/seitenkanmother3style-2.png
:heh:
:dots:
This was Vivi's, and it don't look nthing like VN sprites. :heh:
Kaisos Erranon
2010-01-13, 04:23
Flashes in Space- Memories in Pieces (KOIZUMI)
“Hey,” I said to Kyon. “Have you ever had a dream where you were held up by some crazy woman with a weird gun, only it might not actually have been a dream, but actually was, but then it was just a drug-induced hallucination, but was actually a fantasy that you thought up one day when you were bored, then was real after all, then wasn't, or maybe it was, and you felt you got cheated out of your money because the movie made no sense?”
“..............................Hah?” Kyon give me the kind of look you give someone who should be committed. In fact, she might be thinking of calling the nuthouse right now.
No! I don't want to be shut in a rubber room! I am not a number! I am a free bumblebee!
“Bzzzzzzzzzzzzz,” I said.
Alas, instead of redeeming myself in her eyes, I have only become more of an idiot. I suppose this was inevitable. ...If I had a time machine, I'd like to go back to two minutes ago and make myself look cool and suave instead of stupid and lame.
But that's a story for another day.
“Anyway, we finally have a transfer student!” I hovered over Kyon's desk like a large UFO, ready to abduct her for horrible experiments. “It's awesome, isn't it? The transfer student's finally here! A transfer student! This is a once-in-a-lifetime chance! Sure, its unfortunate that they're not in our class, but still - definitely an MTS (Mysterious Transfer Student), no doubt about that! A transfer student! Wheeeeeeee!”
I was trying to make her smile, but she just looked more annoyed.
“You've never even met the person, how can you be so sure?”
Aw, come on. At least pay a little bit of attention to things that I say.
"Didn't I tell you? Studies show that a high percentage of students who transfer to schools in the middle of the school term are Mysterious!" Mysterious with a capital M. That's how you know it's important.
Kyon immediately went on a slightly angry rant about the nature of statistics and how transfer students are ridiculously common, but I decided to ignore her. I was too busy being excited about the transfer student.
FLASH
At the end of first period, I bolted out of the classroom at Warp Five, leaving Kyon clutching his head in despair. It only took me five seconds to reach Class 1-9, the new home of the Mysterious Transfer Student.
I kicked open the door. And by “kicked open”, I mean “slid open with enough force that it went flying off its rails and knocked one of the girls in the back row unconscious.”
I grabbed some milquetoast standing nearby and, using my best angry voice, yelled “Where's the transfer student at?!” I think he wet himself, but was too busy yelling to notice.
Milquetoast pointed at a group of girls sitting in the top left corner of the desks, who had been shocked into silence by my impressive and manly voice. I strode over them, making sure to put on my best rape face.
“So...” I said quietly and carefully. “Which one of you is the transfer student?”
Three of the girls were about to faint, but the fourth one calmly raised her hand, as though a scary person wasn't standing right in front of her.
“That would be me. I'm Itsuko Koizumi. Pleased to meet you.”
...! It's the enemy! No, wait, it's an extremely beautiful girl!
Perfect face! Perfect eyes! Perfectly formed lips! A perfect smile Perfect wavy hair! (Needs a ponytail, though. And maybe a big ribbon.) Perfect hands! She's even wearing pantyhose, which is perfect! And... gasp! Barely concealed, barely contained beneath her uniform! Are those... perfect breasts!?
IT'S PERFECT!
This woman is, physically, perfect. That means one of three things. Either she's an esper, a seductive secret agent, or a murdering psychopath.
Any which way you look, she's perfect for my club!
I pull up a nearby chair and sit down with my arms on the backrest, smiling in what I think is a nonchalant way. Time to begin the Questioning Period.
“Koizumi-san, right~?”
She nods. The other girls are backing away. I pretend they don't exist.
“Where are you from?”
“Tokyo Metropolis.”
Damn, I was hoping she'd say something like 'F City, F Prefecture.'
“What's your true identity?”
“A high school student, I believe. Also a woman.”
Hmm. Very normal.
“Are you an alien!?”
“Not since the last time I checked.”
Geh, smooth. Too smooth.
“Koizumi-san, will you marry me!?”
“Now, is that the, ah, sort of question you should be asking at this stage in our relationship, Suzumiya-san? At least wait until the first date...”
...? I didn't introduce myself...
“How could I not have heard of you, Suzumiya-san?” She gives an over-exaggerated shrug. Mysterious. “You are, shall we say... infamous.”
Hmmmmmm.
FLASH
At the next break, leaving Kyon in the dust once again, I ran over to the 1-9 classroom. They'd already fixed the door. How diligent. Oops, there it goes again.
Koizumi-san was talking with her friends again, all of whom were obviously paying less attention to her words and more to her assets. I'm sure she notices, but I don't think she cares.
How Mysterious. Remember, the capital is significant.
I stride across the room, knocking aside desks and chairs and a girl with a bandage on her head in my rampage.
“Koooooizumi-san?”
“Yes, what is it, Suzumiya-san?” Her worshippers had all gone to hide in conspicuous locations.
“I, Haruki Suzumiya, would like to ask you to join my club, the SOS Brigade! Together, we shall conquer the universe!”
In response, she gives me a wicked, foxlike smile.
She's perfect.
FLASH
I kicked open the door. And by “kick open”, I mean “shoved open with extreme prejudice”, since it's kind of awkward to kick open a door while pulling someone along.
“Heeeey guys. Kept ya waiting, didn't I?” I happily interrupted Mitsuuru-kun and Nagato-san's game of Othello. “This is 1-9's new Mysterious Transfer Student! His name is--”
The overly handsome, hairspray commercial introduced himself. To be honest, I really do like this guy, even if he's irritatingly perfect. Since he's only slightly less attractive than I am, he's the perfect person to have as your wingman.
“I'm Itsuki Koizumi. Pleased to meet you all.”
Kyon stood up and spent a moment or two sizing up my new recruit. Itsuki-kun only gave her a brilliant smile, and she blushed noticeably.
I resisted my sudden impulse to throw Itsuki-kun out the window.
"This is the SOS Brigade Club Room! I'm the Commander, Haruki Suzumiya! These are Subordinates One, Two, and Three. That makes you Number Four, so remember to get along!” I waggled a finger at him.
And if you get along a little too well, it's defenestration for you, my boy.
“Well, I don't mind joining, of course... but what kind of club is this?”
Oh. Oh my. He asked. He asked the question. The question that I've been wanting to hear from the very beginning. Ku. Ku ku. Kukukukukukukukuku.
Of course, I had to make the answer up on the spot, since I really haven't given much thought to the answer.
“You didn't know?” I said, pushing up my invisible glasses. "Then let me enlighten you as to the true purpose of the SOS Brigade!"
FLASH
“Ah! Excuse me!”
Of course, walking in on a sight like that would be a surprise to any man, manly or not. I have Asahina-san on the floor, dressed in a maid uniform. I'm molesting her, and Kyon was just about to kick me in the nose when Itsuki-kun showed up.
The true measure of a man is how they deal with this situation.
He looks... puzzled. “Is this some sort of club activity?”
Perfect! “I knew I could count on you, Itsuki-kun! You came at just the right time! I have a job for you!”
Dropping Asahina-san, who I've throughly ruined for marriage, I hasten to whisper my nefarious plot into Itsuki-kun's ear.
“What's going on here?” It's Kyon, who is, of course, suspicious.
“Remember that present I promised you?” I had to promise her something to get her to work on my website a few days ago, although at the time I had no intention of giving her anything... this has changed.
A look of sheer, concentrated, utter, absolute terror passed over Kyon's face. I grabbed a bag in a corner that I had prepared earlier, and pulled out a pair of red bunny ears.
Ku ku ku ku ku HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HAAA!
I laughed inside of my head.
Kyon tried to escape and even threatened me with a rape lawsuit, but I just pushed her into Itsuki-kun, threw him the bag, dragged Yuuki-kun and a sobbing Asahina-san outside, and locked the door behind me.
It wasn't long before I heard the screams. Aaaah. Delicious suffering. It tastes like veal, which also tastes like suffering. And baby cow.
Wait.
Did I just.
Lock Kyon.
Alone.
In a room.
With a guy I barely know?
And who I told to strip and force her into a bunny girl outfit, and that he could cop a feel on the side if he felt like it?
Why did I do that? Why would I do that?
The fact that she's screaming now would imply...
“ITSUKI-KUUUUN!”
I wrench open the door, grab that rat bastard by the collar and the seat of his pants, and chuck him out the window.
Defenestratiooooooon!
CRASH
“You seem to be upset, Suzumiya-san,” Koizumi-san says to me.
I'm not upset. Even if Kyon is all alone, walking somewhere with Mitsuuru-kun. Why would I be upset?
We're in some random park in the middle of town. Koizumi-san and I are sitting on a bench while Nagato-san stares at birds.
“...You don't have a girlfriend, do you?”
I'm a little annoyed by this line of questioning, but I'll let it slide. “I've dated lots and lots of girls... but nah, don't have one currently.”
“...Then,” Koizumi-san looks at me slyly. “...Do you want a girlfriend...?”
...
Hey now.
I paste a grin on my visage. “If you're trying to ask me out, I'm afraid I'm going to have to refuse, pleasant as it would be. I don't want to damage our working relationship.”
She shakes her head. “No, it's not that...”
Oh, good. That would definitely have damaged our working relationship.
Her voice turns deadly serious. “I am asking in objective terms, Suzumiya-san: Do you or do you not want a girlfriend?”
Koizumi-san's eyes are like pools of toxic black liquid. Deadly, but in a strange way, beautiful.
FLASH
We split up again later on... this time, my group consisted of myself, Koizumi-san, and Asahina-san. In other words, Kyon got to go with Yuuki-kun this time.
...I'm not really that upset. If I was upset, I'd be crushing the paper cup my soda came in. ...Oh, wait, I just did that. Must be a reflex.
...The minute she realized she was going to be in a group with me, Asahina-san ran away screaming... it took us all of the time I allotted to catch her.
What a waste of time.
When the three of us got back to the meeting place, however, no one was there, even though it was quarter after four already.
Where the hell are those two!? What on earth are they doing!?
Koizumi-san convinced me to just be patient and wait, but “patient” and “wait” aren't in my dictionary. ...Nonetheless, I did wait fifteen minutes before deciding to call.
“Exactly what time do you think it is now!?”
I'm much, much angrier than I thought I'd be.
“Sorry, I just woke up...”
...
... Just woke up, huh?
Just woke up, eh?
What does that mean, I wonder?
What does it mean?
Damage control.
“What!? Dumbass! Get your ass over here NOW! I'm giving you thirty seconds!”
I hang up abruptly.
“What's going on?” Koizumi-san asks.
...
“She said she had just woken up.”
“...Ah, I see.”
I slump onto the nearby steps. Almost as if sensing my innermost feelings, Koizumi-san puts a hand on my shoulder.
“I'm sure she had just fallen asleep somewhere. I'm sure it's not what you're thinking, Suzumiya-san.”
I brush her away. “I wasn't thinking of anything. I'm just pissed that she has the audacity to be this late!”
I call Kyon a few more times for good measure, but she never picks up.
I live alone in a world full of lies. Despite her best efforts, Koizumi-san will never be able to join me there.
I like being alone.
FLASH
I'm an idiot. Well, I already knew that, but this just further proves my idiocy.
I opened myself up completely to Kyon today. I laid bare all of my frustrations. That was a mistake.
By voicing them to someone else, my fear, anger, and melancholy have all gained substance. My lies are made manifest.
I'm surrounded, trapped by my own turmoil on all sides.
The vibration of my cellphone snaps me back to the reality of the uncomfortable telephone I'm leaning against.
It's a text message from... Koizumi-san, of all people? What she doing, sending me something like this?
Suzumiya-san,
I joined your club because of how impressed I was by your determination to succeed at a goal that most people would consider insane. A goal that I, as part of your wonderful club, now share.
I am sorry. I'm having trouble expressing myself.
What I mean to say is this: As long as you believe in something strongly enough, it will, without fail, come true. I can guarantee this much.
If you believe strongly that one day you will meet aliens, time travellers, and espers, one day, you will find them. And if you believe strongly that one day you will discover true love... I have faith that you'll succeed.
Although there are times when it might seem impossible, I urge you: Never give up on your dreams.
Itsuko<3
...Who writes text messages in the style of letters? At least send this sort of thing by email.
...Sigh. Thank you, Koizumi-san. Thank you so much.
But it's too late now. I've already given up on one dream, and the other is soon to follow.
...
...
...
Still. I think this can be a tiny shard of light in the middle of my darkness.
...I think Koizumi-san deserves a promotion for this.
I get up and stretch. Enough moping around for one day.
I cross the road and get hit by a black taxi cab.
CRASH
I wake up on the sidewalk, apparently unharmed. Except for the fact that I'm a woman.
I spend about five minutes causing various physical injuries to myself before I'm sure that it isn't a dream.
So... in this situation, what should I do...? I guess I'll try contacting someone and see if they know a way to return myself to normal. ...Koizumi-san seems like she'd know about this kind of thing.
I call, but an unknown man answers, addressing me as “Suzumiya-san”. I hang up out of apprehension.
Already, I suspect what's happening, but... to make sure, I call the others.
Same deal. I call Mitsuuru-kun. Some girl answers, knows who I am, I hang up. I call Yuuki. There's no response other than light breathing, so I hang up.
I call Kyon's cell. Some pissed-off sounding guy answers, calls me 'Haruhi', and tells me not to bother him any more today.
I hang up, but he calls me back.
...He sounds worried, and asks where I am. He'll be right there, he says.
He must have detected the fear in my womanly voice.
I throw my pink cellphone into the garbage, and return home.
My parents are people I don't know.
I greet them causally, then go into my room.
...It's much the same as it always is, except for the underwear. At least there are some constants in the world.
I don't want to live like this.
I've spent my whole life looking for change, for something exciting to do, and when thing are finally different... I want them to be the same.
How horribly ironic.
I just want to die. Please, someone let me die.
It's melodramatic, but it's how I feel. We all feel like that sometimes. Most of us don't have the guts to go through with it, and life continues on.
...I fish around in my skirt pocket for something to kill myself with. Maybe I carry a taser.
No, it's just a silver tube of lipstick.
...No wait. It's not a tube of lipstick. It's a handgun. And it's already loaded. How convenient.
Mechanically, I slowly raise the gun up... and point the barrel at the bottom of my chin.
It's ice cold. The barrel, not my chin.
Death is but the next great adventure.
Centimeter by centimeter, I squeeze the trigger.
...Who knows what lies beyond death?
I will.
The distinct noise of a gunshot is the last sound that I will leave behind.
FLASH
Always remember: What is true for the one is true for the other.
Kiss kiss. Bang bang.
FLASH
And then I “wake up”.
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-13, 06:29
Um... wow...
beanbrew
2010-01-13, 06:58
Defenestratiooooooon!
Best. Line. EVER.
Wait. Haruhi/Haruki kills himself/herself?
oh. my. god. (NOT HARUHI!)
so it's a bad end for the esper route huh?
How long do you think Kaisos will mindscrew us until his next post WITH COMMENTS?
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-13, 07:44
Technically, Haruki just killed Haruhi. Sort of. You probably would too, if you were in her place. I mean his.
worldruined
2010-01-13, 09:04
Defenestratiooooooon!
Turns out that Mysterious transfer students can fly fall with style. Who knew?
I really love your Haruki, Kaisos. I may have to send him chocolates for Valentine's Day.
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-13, 09:47
Oh look, the attempts at making Haruki an unappealing jerk backfired. :p
Flashes in Space- Memories in Pieces (KOIZUMI)
“Hey,” I said to Kyon. “Have you ever had a dream where you were held up by some crazy woman with a weird gun, only it might not actually have been a dream, but actually was, but then it was just a drug-induced hallucination, but was actually a fantasy that you thought up one day when you were bored, then was real after all, then wasn't, or maybe it was, and you felt you got cheated out of your money because the movie made no sense?”
“..............................Hah?” Kyon give me the kind of look you give someone who should be committed. In fact, she might be thinking of calling the nuthouse right now.
No! I don't want to be shut in a rubber room! I am not a number! I am a free bumblebee!
“Bzzzzzzzzzzzzz,” I said.
Alas, instead of redeeming myself in her eyes, I have only become more of an idiot. I suppose this was inevitable. ...If I had a time machine, I'd like to go back to two minutes ago and make myself look cool and suave instead of stupid and lame.
But that's a story for another day.
“Anyway, we finally have a transfer student!” I hovered over Kyon's desk like a large UFO, ready to abduct her for horrible experiments. “It's awesome, isn't it? The transfer student's finally here! A transfer student! This is a once-in-a-lifetime chance! Sure, its unfortunate that they're not in our class, but still - definitely an MTS (Mysterious Transfer Student), no doubt about that! A transfer student! Wheeeeeeee!”
I was trying to make her smile, but she just looked more annoyed.
“You've never even met the person, how can you be so sure?”
Aw, come on. At least pay a little bit of attention to things that I say.
"Didn't I tell you? Studies show that a high percentage of students who transfer to schools in the middle of the school term are Mysterious!" Mysterious with a capital M. That's how you know it's important.
Kyon immediately went on a slightly angry rant about the nature of statistics and how transfer students are ridiculously common, but I decided to ignore her. I was too busy being excited about the transfer student.
FLASH
At the end of first period, I bolted out of the classroom at Warp Five, leaving Kyon clutching his head in despair. It only took me five seconds to reach Class 1-9, the new home of the Mysterious Transfer Student.
I kicked open the door. And by “kicked open”, I mean “slid open with enough force that it went flying off its rails and knocked one of the girls in the back row unconscious.”
I grabbed some milquetoast standing nearby and, using my best angry voice, yelled “Where's the transfer student at?!” I think he wet himself, but was too busy yelling to notice.
Milquetoast pointed at a group of girls sitting in the top left corner of the desks, who had been shocked into silence by my impressive and manly voice. I strode over them, making sure to put on my best rape face.
“So...” I said quietly and carefully. “Which one of you is the transfer student?”
Three of the girls were about to faint, but the fourth one calmly raised her hand, as though a scary person wasn't standing right in front of her.
“That would be me. I'm Itsuko Koizumi. Pleased to meet you.”
...! It's the enemy! No, wait, it's an extremely beautiful girl!
Perfect face! Perfect eyes! Perfectly formed lips! A perfect smile Perfect wavy hair! (Needs a ponytail, though. And maybe a big ribbon.) Perfect hands! She's even wearing pantyhose, which is perfect! And... gasp! Barely concealed, barely contained beneath her uniform! Are those... perfect breasts!?
IT'S PERFECT!
This woman is, physically, perfect. That means one of three things. Either she's an esper, a seductive secret agent, or a murdering psychopath.
Any which way you look, she's perfect for my club!
I pull up a nearby chair and sit down with my arms on the backrest, smiling in what I think is a nonchalant way. Time to begin the Questioning Period.
“Koizumi-san, right~?”
She nods. The other girls are backing away. I pretend they don't exist.
“Where are you from?”
“Tokyo Metropolis.”
Damn, I was hoping she'd say something like 'F City, F Prefecture.'
“What's your true identity?”
“A high school student, I believe. Also a woman.”
Hmm. Very normal.
“Are you an alien!?”
“Not since the last time I checked.”
Geh, smooth. Too smooth.
“Koizumi-san, will you marry me!?”
“Now, is that the, ah, sort of question you should be asking at this stage in our relationship, Suzumiya-san? At least wait until the first date...”
...? I didn't introduce myself...
“How could I not have heard of you, Suzumiya-san?” She gives an over-exaggerated shrug. Mysterious. “You are, shall we say... infamous.”
Hmmmmmm.
FLASH
At the next break, leaving Kyon in the dust once again, I ran over to the 1-9 classroom. They'd already fixed the door. How diligent. Oops, there it goes again.
Koizumi-san was talking with her friends again, all of whom were obviously paying less attention to her words and more to her assets. I'm sure she notices, but I don't think she cares.
How Mysterious. Remember, the capital is significant.
I stride across the room, knocking aside desks and chairs and a girl with a bandage on her head in my rampage.
“Koooooizumi-san?”
“Yes, what is it, Suzumiya-san?” Her worshippers had all gone to hide in conspicuous locations.
“I, Haruki Suzumiya, would like to ask you to join my club, the SOS Brigade! Together, we shall conquer the universe!”
In response, she gives me a wicked, foxlike smile.
She's perfect.
FLASH
I kicked open the door. And by “kick open”, I mean “shoved open with extreme prejudice”, since it's kind of awkward to kick open a door while pulling someone along.
“Heeeey guys. Kept ya waiting, didn't I?” I happily interrupted Mitsuuru-kun and Nagato-san's game of Othello. “This is 1-9's new Mysterious Transfer Student! His name is--”
The overly handsome, hairspray commercial introduced himself. To be honest, I really do like this guy, even if he's irritatingly perfect. Since he's only slightly less attractive than I am, he's the perfect person to have as your wingman.
“I'm Itsuki Koizumi. Pleased to meet you all.”
Kyon stood up and spent a moment or two sizing up my new recruit. Itsuki-kun only gave her a brilliant smile, and she blushed noticeably.
I resisted my sudden impulse to throw Itsuki-kun out the window.
"This is the SOS Brigade Club Room! I'm the Commander, Haruki Suzumiya! These are Subordinates One, Two, and Three. That makes you Number Four, so remember to get along!” I waggled a finger at him.
And if you get along a little too well, it's defenestration for you, my boy.
“Well, I don't mind joining, of course... but what kind of club is this?”
Oh. Oh my. He asked. He asked the question. The question that I've been wanting to hear from the very beginning. Ku. Ku ku. Kukukukukukukukuku.
Of course, I had to make the answer up on the spot, since I really haven't given much thought to the answer.
“You didn't know?” I said, pushing up my invisible glasses. "Then let me enlighten you as to the true purpose of the SOS Brigade!"
FLASH
“Ah! Excuse me!”
Of course, walking in on a sight like that would be a surprise to any man, manly or not. I have Asahina-san on the floor, dressed in a maid uniform. I'm molesting her, and Kyon was just about to kick me in the nose when Itsuki-kun showed up.
The true measure of a man is how they deal with this situation.
He looks... puzzled. “Is this some sort of club activity?”
Perfect! “I knew I could count on you, Itsuki-kun! You came at just the right time! I have a job for you!”
Dropping Asahina-san, who I've throughly ruined for marriage, I hasten to whisper my nefarious plot into Itsuki-kun's ear.
“What's going on here?” It's Kyon, who is, of course, suspicious.
“Remember that present I promised you?” I had to promise her something to get her to work on my website a few days ago, although at the time I had no intention of giving her anything... this has changed.
A look of sheer, concentrated, utter, absolute terror passed over Kyon's face. I grabbed a bag in a corner that I had prepared earlier, and pulled out a pair of red bunny ears.
Ku ku ku ku ku HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HAAA!
I laughed inside of my head.
Kyon tried to escape and even threatened me with a rape lawsuit, but I just pushed her into Itsuki-kun, threw him the bag, dragged Yuuki-kun and a sobbing Asahina-san outside, and locked the door behind me.
It wasn't long before I heard the screams. Aaaah. Delicious suffering. It tastes like veal, which also tastes like suffering. And baby cow.
Wait.
Did I just.
Lock Kyon.
Alone.
In a room.
With a guy I barely know?
And who I told to strip and force her into a bunny girl outfit, and that he could cop a feel on the side if he felt like it?
Why did I do that? Why would I do that?
The fact that she's screaming now would imply...
“ITSUKI-KUUUUN!”
I wrench open the door, grab that rat bastard by the collar and the seat of his pants, and chuck him out the window.
Defenestratiooooooon!
CRASH
“You seem to be upset, Suzumiya-san,” Koizumi-san says to me.
I'm not upset. Even if Kyon is all alone, walking somewhere with Mitsuuru-kun. Why would I be upset?
We're in some random park in the middle of town. Koizumi-san and I are sitting on a bench while Nagato-san stares at birds.
“...You don't have a girlfriend, do you?”
I'm a little annoyed by this line of questioning, but I'll let it slide. “I've dated lots and lots of girls... but nah, don't have one currently.”
“...Then,” Koizumi-san looks at me slyly. “...Do you want a girlfriend...?”
...
Hey now.
I paste a grin on my visage. “If you're trying to ask me out, I'm afraid I'm going to have to refuse, pleasant as it would be. I don't want to damage our working relationship.”
She shakes her head. “No, it's not that...”
Oh, good. That would definitely have damaged our working relationship.
Her voice turns deadly serious. “I am asking in objective terms, Suzumiya-san: Do you or do you not want a girlfriend?”
Koizumi-san's eyes are like pools of toxic black liquid. Deadly, but in a strange way, beautiful.
FLASH
We split up again later on... this time, my group consisted of myself, Koizumi-san, and Asahina-san. In other words, Kyon got to go with Yuuki-kun this time.
...I'm not really that upset. If I was upset, I'd be crushing the paper cup my soda came in. ...Oh, wait, I just did that. Must be a reflex.
...The minute she realized she was going to be in a group with me, Asahina-san ran away screaming... it took us all of the time I allotted to catch her.
What a waste of time.
When the three of us got back to the meeting place, however, no one was there, even though it was quarter after four already.
Where the hell are those two!? What on earth are they doing!?
Koizumi-san convinced me to just be patient and wait, but “patient” and “wait” aren't in my dictionary. ...Nonetheless, I did wait fifteen minutes before deciding to call.
“Exactly what time do you think it is now!?”
I'm much, much angrier than I thought I'd be.
“Sorry, I just woke up...”
...
... Just woke up, huh?
Just woke up, eh?
What does that mean, I wonder?
What does it mean?
Damage control.
“What!? Dumbass! Get your ass over here NOW! I'm giving you thirty seconds!”
I hang up abruptly.
“What's going on?” Koizumi-san asks.
...
“She said she had just woken up.”
“...Ah, I see.”
I slump onto the nearby steps. Almost as if sensing my innermost feelings, Koizumi-san puts a hand on my shoulder.
“I'm sure she had just fallen asleep somewhere. I'm sure it's not what you're thinking, Suzumiya-san.”
I brush her away. “I wasn't thinking of anything. I'm just pissed that she has the audacity to be this late!”
I call Kyon a few more times for good measure, but she never picks up.
I live alone in a world full of lies. Despite her best efforts, Koizumi-san will never be able to join me there.
I like being alone.
FLASH
I'm an idiot. Well, I already knew that, but this just further proves my idiocy.
I opened myself up completely to Kyon today. I laid bare all of my frustrations. That was a mistake.
By voicing them to someone else, my fear, anger, and melancholy have all gained substance. My lies are made manifest.
I'm surrounded, trapped by my own turmoil on all sides.
The vibration of my cellphone snaps me back to the reality of the uncomfortable telephone I'm leaning against.
It's a text message from... Koizumi-san, of all people? What she doing, sending me something like this?
Suzumiya-san,
I joined your club because of how impressed I was by your determination to succeed at a goal that most people would consider insane. A goal that I, as part of your wonderful club, now share.
I am sorry. I'm having trouble expressing myself.
What I mean to say is this: As long as you believe in something strongly enough, it will, without fail, come true. I can guarantee this much.
If you believe strongly that one day you will meet aliens, time travellers, and espers, one day, you will find them. And if you believe strongly that one day you will discover true love... I have faith that you'll succeed.
Although there are times when it might seem impossible, I urge you: Never give up on your dreams.
Itsuko<3
...Who writes text messages in the style of letters? At least send this sort of thing by email.
...Sigh. Thank you, Koizumi-san. Thank you so much.
But it's too late now. I've already given up on one dream, and the other is soon to follow.
...
...
...
Still. I think this can be a tiny shard of light in the middle of my darkness.
...I think Koizumi-san deserves a promotion for this.
I get up and stretch. Enough moping around for one day.
I cross the road and get hit by a black taxi cab.
CRASH
I wake up on the sidewalk, apparently unharmed. Except for the fact that I'm a woman.
I spend about five minutes causing various physical injuries to myself before I'm sure that it isn't a dream.
So... in this situation, what should I do...? I guess I'll try contacting someone and see if they know a way to return myself to normal. ...Koizumi-san seems like she'd know about this kind of thing.
I call, but an unknown man answers, addressing me as “Suzumiya-san”. I hang up out of apprehension.
Already, I suspect what's happening, but... to make sure, I call the others.
Same deal. I call Mitsuuru-kun. Some girl answers, knows who I am, I hang up. I call Yuuki. There's no response other than light breathing, so I hang up.
I call Kyon's cell. Some pissed-off sounding guy answers, calls me 'Haruhi', and tells me not to bother him any more today.
I hang up, but he calls me back.
...He sounds worried, and asks where I am. He'll be right there, he says.
He must have detected the fear in my womanly voice.
I throw my pink cellphone into the garbage, and return home.
My parents are people I don't know.
I greet them causally, then go into my room.
...It's much the same as it always is, except for the underwear. At least there are some constants in the world.
I don't want to live like this.
I've spent my whole life looking for change, for something exciting to do, and when thing are finally different... I want them to be the same.
How horribly ironic.
I just want to die.
I fish around in my skirt pocket for something to kill myself with. Maybe I carry a taser.
No, it's just a silver tube of lipstick.
...No wait. It's not a tube of lipstick. It's a handgun. And it's already loaded. How convenient.
Mechanically, I slowly raise the gun up... and point the barrel at the bottom of my chin.
It's ice cold. The barrel, not my chin.
Centimeter by centimeter, I squeeze the trigger.
The distinct noise of a gunshot is the last sound that I will leave behind.
FLASH
Always remember: What is true for the one is true for the other.
Kiss kiss. Bang bang.
FLASH
And then I “wake up”.
Ok, this dream was somewhat weirder then usual. Anyway, it seens Kyon is not dead, after all. Well, it was the most probable outcome, but I find a pitty. We still need to know what the hell happened, however.
Oh, yeah, your Haruki is awesome, but I think it is a good thing he don't exist. He is complete dangerous jerk. You can't defenestrate people just for doing what you told them to do. :p
Also, I find interesting the first scene don't happen like in the rewrite, even tough they should. I also find hilarious Haruki's conclusion about Itsuko. Not only by he being right in two of his assumptions (ESPer and secret agent) but also because I could see how he came to that conclusion. :heh: This also make me wonder if he would invitate Ryouko to his club. :p
Lastly, I suggest excluding "I said to Kyon." from the very first line. It is a VN, after all. I am always assuming every 'block' of text is suppose to be fit in a single box, right?
Oh look, the attempts at making Haruki an unappealing jerk backfired. :p
Nah, I believe he was always suppose to be a appealing jerk. He may be a unlikable jerkass, but he is ridiculously funny in that flashbacks. :p
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-13, 13:14
You can't defenestrate people just for doing what you told them to do. :p
Of course you can. Comes with the territory of being a complete jerk. :p
Magnificate
2010-01-13, 18:25
Moping to the point of suicide? That doesn't ring true for Haruki in my opinion. Still, the previous scenes, especially the defenestration read great.
Roger Rambo
2010-01-13, 18:50
Flashes in Space- Memories in Pieces (KOIZUMI)Perfect face! Perfect eyes! Perfectly formed lips! A perfect smile Perfect wavy hair! (Needs a ponytail, though. And maybe a big ribbon.) Perfect hands! She's even wearing pantyhose, which is perfect! And... gasp! Barely concealed, barely contained beneath her uniform! Are those... perfect breasts!?
IT'S PERFECT!
This woman is, physically, perfect. That means one of three things. Either she's an esper, a seductive secret agent, or a murdering psychopath.
Haruki is surprisingly smart here.
Wait.
Did I just.
Lock Kyon.
Alone.
In a room.
With a guy I barely know?
And who I told to strip and force her into a bunny girl outfit, and that he could cop a feel on the side if he felt like it?
Why did I do that? Why would I do that?
Haruki is surprisingly stupid here.
edkedkedk
2010-01-13, 18:52
Oh, yeah, your Haruki is awesome, but I think it is a good thing he don't exist. He is complete dangerous jerk. You can't defenestrate people just for doing what you told them to do. :p
Well, this is what happens if you give a Genki girl like Haruhi loads and loads of testosterone :heh:
I just got into this series, reading the past two chapters, and I must say, it's very refreshing to see characters blending in and out flawlessly from both universes. Although sometimes I get confused, and the cliffhanger in the previous chapter hasn't been resolved :( , but overall it's still a great read!
But I really doubt Haruki will kill himself straight after he found out his gender change. I mean, this is a mysterious event, one that he has been looking for all his life, and he immediately throws it all away by offing himself? A little weird...
Roger Rambo
2010-01-13, 18:57
Flashes in Space- Memories in Pieces (KOIZUMI)
At the end of first period, I bolted out of the classroom at Warp Five, leaving Kyon clutching his head in despair. It only took me five seconds to reach Class 1-9, the new home of the Mysterious Transfer Student.
Quick question, is this a typo are is Haruki dealing with Kyon(m) in some of these sequences.
But I really doubt Haruki will kill himself straight after he found out his gender change. I mean, this is a mysterious event, one that he has been looking for all his life, and he immediately throws it all away by offing himself? A little weird...
Hint: this hadn't really happened. ;) As you just came in it might be confusing, but all this is a wierd dream Kyon is having. It is More or less Haruki memories, but weirdly modifyed.
Give a look into my archive (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2862489&postcount=21747) to read from the begining.
Haruki is surprisingly stupid here.
Ah, well, I believe in the original (by his POV) version of this scene the one there was Itsuko. It is considerably less alkward making the only other girl of the club stiping and cloathing Kyon. :heh:
Quick question, is this a typo are is Haruki dealing with Kyon(m) in some of these sequences.
The latter, I believe. It also happens in the other "Memories in Pieces"
edkedkedk
2010-01-13, 19:42
Hint: this hadn't really happened. ;) As you just came in it might be confusing, but all this is a wierd dream Kyon is having. It is More or less Haruki memories, but weirdly modifyed.
Give a look into my archive (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2862489&postcount=21747) to read from the begining.
Ah, now I get it! I'll read it all from the beginning to have a clearer view of what's happening. It's all very intriguing so far. Thanks! :smile:
Magnificate
2010-01-13, 19:44
Hint: this hadn't really happened. ;)
Well, that doesn't change the fact that I wouldn't associate that kind of action with Haruki. ;)
Roger Rambo
2010-01-13, 23:05
Ah, well, I believe in the original (by his POV) version of this scene the one there was Itsuko. It is considerably less alkward making the only other girl of the club stiping and cloathing Kyon. :heh:
Obviously. Except here it IS IsukI.
Thus Haruki is being pretty stupid.
Lipstuck
In fact, I remember those old folk tales of hundred-year-old kitsune taking the form of beautiful women and tricking witless men.
I remember it because it applies pretty well to my current situation.
Steel brushes against the underside of my chin. Even in this heat, it's ice cold.
...How did this even happen?
---
The pathway by the river is, in the spring, unofficially reserved for lovers, who walk under the falling cherry blossoms in bliss. As someone who's never had a real girlfriend, I've always been extremely jealous of people who can just flaunt their relationships like that.
Itsuko: So, you're saying that we look like a pair of lovers right now?
Kyon: ...! That isn't what I was...
Yamada-san laughs in that strange, cartoonish way again.
Itsuko: Hohohoho, you're way too easy. Although, to be honest, I'd heard about that tradition before inviting you here. ...Now that you know this, wouldn't you think I had some ulterior motive in doing so?
Kyon: ...You...
This woman is so far out of my league, and in so many ways... Even trying to hold a conversation with her is like heavy exercise.
Still... the effort is proportional to the payout, and spending time with a girl this beautiful is more than worth it.
I should probably be straight about this, though.
Kyon: Yamada-san...
Itsuko: Hmm, what is it? Going to confess? It's about time.
Kyon: ...It's about who you really are. I heard from your cousin.
Itsuko: ......?
Kyon: Your real name is Itsuko Koizumi, and you're an esper. ...Sorry, I pumped Koizumi for the info... I was curious.
Not that I think he told me everything, of course...
Itsuko: ...So, you know my secret. ...I certainly hope it doesn't change your opinion of me.
She looks dejected, which is an extremely cute look on her. ...Nonetheless, I feel the need to wipe this negative expression and restore her smile.
Kyon: Of course not. If I thought worse of you for lying to me, I wouldn't be here with you right now.
Itsuko: Oh, that's good then.
She's back to normal already! Well, she was probably never sad at all in the first place.
Itsuko: May I make a request?
Kyon: What is it?
Itsuko: I'd like you to still call me “Yamada-san”, if you'd like. I feel it establishes a personal connection between us, one that means a lot to me.
Sure thing, Yamada-san.
She winks at me again. I think my poor heart is going to give out from this alone.
Itsuko: Shall we continue?
---
Things had returned to normal, except that Yamada-san, who had formerly been walking about three feet away from me, was now close enough for our shoulders to touch. If she were Koizumi, I would have told her to get away from me, but... I'm okay with this!
Kyon: So, uh. Where are you from, anyway?
Itsuko: Oh, do you really have to know? I'd prefer it if my past were intentionally kept in the dark. Don't you think a mysterious unknown backstory makes me more interesting? ...Or would you continue to like me anyway?
As she says this, she stares directly into my eyes, as though daring me to find another interpretation of that question.
I'll have to avoid it entirely.
Kyon: ...I'm just curious.
Itsuko: Sigh. Very well.
She looks disappointed that I didn't take the bait, but you won't ensare me that easily, ohoho.
Dammit, it's catching.
Itsuko: I'm from Tokyo.
Kyon: ...
Itsuko: ...
Kyon: Is that it?
Itsuko: Why, yes.
...Moving on.
---
Itsuko: Enough about my mysterious past. Tell me about yourself, Kyon-kun. What are your hobbies, besides staring at women you find attractive when you think they're not looking?
Kyon: I don't really have any, to be honest.
Itsuko: ...You could at least react to my carefully worded statements, but I suppose you have built up a tolerance already. I had better change tactics. Do you belong to any clubs?
Kyon: You already know the answer to this, I'm sure. I belong to a club where all I do is follow the orders of an insane dictator and try to keep her subconscious mind from destroying the world. Speaking of which, we're always looking for members. If you're mysterious enough, I'm sure Haruhi will let you join... I'd love to have you with us.
Let's see how she takes that.
Itsuko: ...“Haruhi”, hmm? You two sound close... Suddenly, I'm overwhelmed with feelings of jealousy.
She grabs one of my hands with both of hers.
Itsuko: I've changed my mind. Please refer to me as “Kitsuko-chan”... I'll be in your care from now on.
H-her palms are so soft... what does she do to make herself so perfect!?
Kyon: S-s-sure thing, K-Kitsuko-chan.
I feel as though I'm rapidly becoming her servant in both body and soul. And I really don't care.
Itsuko: Hmm, no, it doesn't suit you at all. Stick with “Yamada-san”. It fits your stoic image so much better.
Kyon: ...I have a 'stoic image'?
Itsuko: Certainly. Why, even with your lack of interesting hobbies and involvement with an unsanctioned club well known for being involved in rather shady activities, I'm sure you're very popular with the ladies at North High.
Kyon: Y-you think so?
Even the way she's looking at me is starting to make me feel lightheaded. This isn't good, isn't good.
Itsuko: I do. After all, you're quite good-looking, Kyon-kun. I think it's something about your eyes, and also the aforementioned stoic image. You rarely let your expressions show, except when you are nervous or flustered, like now, for instance. I think many women would find this attractive.
My fried brain is going to make me say stupid things. Like this.
Kyon: ...Are you one of them?
She grins like a fox.
...In English, the word “foxy” means “sexually attractive”. There is no better word to describe Yamada-san.
Itsuko: Hmm. I wonder; hohohohoho.
She really does seem to be enjoying herself. I'm glad that I can provide even this much entertainment for her.
Still...
Kyon: ...It's kind of hard to walk like this, so could you let go of my hand?
Itsuko: But why? You seem to be enjoying it so much.
Kyon: What makes you think that?
Itsuko: Flushed face, sweaty palms, your pulse rate has nearly doubled, and you seem to have completely forgotten that I have facial features.
...She has to keep pointing that out, doesn't she?
---
In the end, Yamada-san didn't let go of my hand. In fact, she stuck as close to me as possible, leaning her head on my shoulder.
Kyon: Y-you can stop any time, by the way.
My brain isn't getting near the oxygen it should. Hell, I can't even think at all with her attached to me like this.
Itsuko: Why? It's clearly making you uncomfortable, and I enjoy making inexperienced men uncomfortable. Oh and please do not misunderstand and assume that I've fallen for you, by the way. I most likely have not. This is all for my own entertainment.
...At least she's being straight about it, I guess. Unlike her cousin.
Itsuko: Oh, I must apologize. Did I crush your still-forming dreams there? If so, don't worry too much. You might still have a chance with me if you, ah, play your metaphorical cards correctly.
...This girl is such a sadist. I really don't mind, though. What I do mind is the appearance we're giving off to other people.
I try to get my thoughts in order. This is difficult to do, because from this position I can see straight down that frilly pink top, a fact that I'm sure she's aware of.
Kyon: Yamada-san...
Itsuko: Is it finally the time for a confession? You know, I might actually accept if you make it good enough. Wish yourself luck!
Kyon: N-not that. I really do think you should let go of me... someone might see, and get the wrong impression...
I sound awkward... but I think all my brain cells have died of asphyxiation anyway, so I no longer care.
Itsuko: Sigh... why are you so concerned with appearances? It really does not matter what others think of you, only what you think of yourself. Besides, by my last count, seven people have already passed us by and mistaken us for a loving couple. It's a little too late to be worrying about the impressions of those around us...
That's not it either...
The thing about Haruhi Suzumiya is that, despite everything about her, she has one of the best information networks I've ever seen or heard tell of. If anyone we both know manages to see me and Yamada-san like this, you can bet Haruhi will know about it before the day is out... and then there'd be a huge misunderstanding, likely culminating in misery for everyone.
Itsuko: So you think Haruhi-chan would get jealous if she saw us like this? Hoh... well, if such a time comes, know that I'd gladly fight her for you.
Kyon: ...
Itsuko: Of course, that was a joke. Perhaps.
Kyon: ...
Itsuko: ...Something the matter? Usually you'd have tried to change the subject by now.
I used to read a lot. In my foolish youth, I remember reading a story about a demon who would appear whenever his name was called three times. Or was it a god, not a demon? It doesn't matter.
Haruhi must be a god (or demon) cut of a similar cloth, because she has appeared, not a hundred yards away.
Itsuko: ...Ah. Hm. How interesting.
Kyon: She's not looking this way... we should escape while we still have the chance...!
Itsuko: Well, I suppose this is the opportune moment.
Yamada-san, her hand still in mine, starts pulling me to the side of the walkway, in the shade of the cherry blossom trees.
Kyon: Hey, wait, we should be running for our lives right about now?
Itsuko: Is “fight or flight” really the only response a human can have to danger? Isn't there another way to go about things? Another basic instinct that drives us all?
She pushes me up against a cherry tree... and then pushes herself up against me.
....S-soft! They're so soft! She's so soft! Softer than I ever could have imagined.
Yamada-san places her hands on my shoulders, then wraps her arms around my neck.
Itsuko: There. Now don't we look like real lovers? As long as you keep you head down and your eyes focused on mine, Haruhi-chan will pass by without even noticing us. Except to perhaps give us a look of disgust.
Kyon: I. Um. I. That. It. We should. Er.
Itsuko: Ssssssh.
The tips of our noses are touching. The deep color of her irises fills my vision. I feel her warm breath on my lips. I'm going to go insane. Perhaps I've already gone insane. Do the insane know that they're insane? Or are they blissfully unaware, as I am of my surroundings right now?
Itsuko: You know, I've been giving it some consideration, and I actually think we should become lovers. Don't you agree?
Kyon: !!!!!
I have no words remaining in my head. All that remains is raw desire and, in a tiny corner, a vague sense of foreboding.
Yamada-san removes her left arm from my neck, and begins to slowly run her hand down my chest. Slowly. Ever so slowly.
Itsuko: Clearly, you want me very badly... and I, on my part, find you a fascinating person. We'd be good together, don't you think?
I nod in a way reminiscent of Nagato. I can't move my head any more. I'd lose all restraint if I did.
Yamada-san's hand stops just below my ribcage, and, for some reason, she sighs.
Itsuko: You're far too gullible. She'd be ashamed to see you like this.
And she punches me in the stomach.
I'd double over with the pain, but Yamada-san's grip prevents me from doing so. In any case, I'm stunned, in many ways.
What just...?
Itsuko: I would suggest you keep very still... you wouldn't want Haruhi-chan to see you like this, would you? After all, she might end up destroying the universe. And we cannot have that, can we?
Kyon: *cough*
Still can't speak... I feel like throwing up...
Yamada pulls a silvery something out of her pocket and presses it lightly against the underside of my chin. I feel the cold caress of steel.
Itsuko: Do you know what this is...? Of course you don't, you can't even see it from this angle. I'll tell you.
Well, it can only be one of two things, if you plan on threatening me with it... but why on earth...?
Itsuko: It's called the “Kiss of Death”. It's a 4.5 mm single-shot pistol disguised as a tube of lipstick, used primarily by KGB spies during the Cold War. I received it as a present from a teacher of mine.
That's great. Lovely. So why are you pointing it at me!?
Itsuko: ...Now that our history lesson is over, I have some questions for you. In case you were wondering, that's the reason I've been stringing you along all this time.
Kyon: ...Q-questions?
I've finally found my voice again, which makes Yamada smile. The smile hasn't changed a bit from five minutes ago when we were smiling cheerfully together.
I can't decide whether that's scary or not.
Itsuko: Yes, questions. I'm sorry to inconvenience you, but it would be nice if you answered them. Correctly, that is. I'll know if you're lying. You see, in a threatening situation like this one, your heart rate would quicken if you tell falsehoods, and, well, my left ring finger is digging into your carotid artery, so...
It's true. It is. It hurts, by the way.
Itsuko: So, without further ado, let's begin. Question one! Do you know of the existence of parallel universes?
Kyon: ...What's that supposed to mean?
What a Haruhi-like question.
Itsuko: I can see that you don't. Next question... oh, wait, here she is. Hold very still, please.
Yamada pushes herself up against me again. This time, it's not very arousing, since I'm much too focused on the lipstick gun brushing against my chin. Nevertheless, Yamada is wearing an expression like the one girls wear when they want to be kissed...
...Her lips are only a centimeter away...
Itsuko: A warning: If you try anything, I will shoot. So, please don't try anything.
Don't worry, I won't.
Haruhi passed without incident, only uttering a “tch!” that went with her typical look of disgust. ...Can you let me go now, Yamada-san?
Itsuko: Question Two.
I suppose not.
Itsuko: Where, exactly, did you get these headphones?
Headphones. The word causes a buzzing to erupt from the pair around my neck.
The buzzing is inaudible. It's something only I can hear.
Kyon: It was a birthday present from--
The pistol digs deep into my skin.
Itsuko: I've already warned you once. Please do not lie.
Kyon: ...Why not?
Yamada looks surprised, then sighs.
Itsuko: You seem to be misunderstanding one of the basic assumptions of our conversation. If you do not answer my questions correctly, I will shoot you through the head. I really, really do not want to do so, since I find--
Kyon: Is that really all it was?
Itsuko: What?
Kyon: All that smiling and laughing and flirting... it was all because you wanted to know where I got these headphones?
Itsuko: ...That isn't entirely true. I originally talked to you in the record store because I found you interesting during our meeting yesterday, but then I saw these.
Tap, tap.
Itsuko: That was when I knew you weren't a person to be trusted. That was when I knew that you had something to do with all this. That you had something to do with him.
Kyon: ...Who?
I know who. It's that guy. The one guy. The guy with the headphones.
Who was he, again?
...The headphones drone on, sounding like a hive. The buzzing almost sounds like a song. A song of vengeance, redemption, and lost and found love.
It's a song I cannot stand to hear. It riles me up. I can feel the buzz.
Kyon: Hey, Yamada-san.
Itsuko: ...Are you ready to answer my question? Please say yes. I don't want to dispose of a body... I've never done so before and I really don't know--
Kyon: That gun isn't loaded, is it?
Itsuko: ...
Kyon: I'm right, aren't I? And because it's not loaded, I can do whatever I want.
Itsuko: Which would be? Don't misunderstand, by the way. I'm not confirming or denying your insane assumption.
Kyon: I can do something like this.
I put my arms around her and close the gap that's a centimeter wide.
The distinct noise of a gunshot rings in my ears.
Here, I have to applaud your restraint from making Itsuko yandere. It's more sensible; Itsuko being a normal (relatively) person forced by circumstances into paranoia. Honestly, I would have made Kyon get zapped by a stungun, then having him wake up to nails being pounded into his fingers. :heh:
Flashes in Space- Memories in Pieces (KOIZUMI)
“Hey,” I said to Kyon. “Have you ever had a dream where you were held up by some crazy woman with a weird gun, only it might not actually have been a dream, but actually was, but then it was just a drug-induced hallucination, but was actually a fantasy that you thought up one day when you were bored, then was real after all, then wasn't, or maybe it was, and you felt you got cheated out of your money because the movie made no sense?”
“..............................Hah?” Kyon give me the kind of look you give someone who should be committed. In fact, she might be thinking of calling the nuthouse right now.
No! I don't want to be shut in a rubber room! I am not a number! I am a free bumblebee!
“Bzzzzzzzzzzzzz,” I said.
Alas, instead of redeeming myself in her eyes, I have only become more of an idiot. I suppose this was inevitable. ...If I had a time machine, I'd like to go back to two minutes ago and make myself look cool and suave instead of stupid and lame.
But that's a story for another day.
“Anyway, we finally have a transfer student!” I hovered over Kyon's desk like a large UFO, ready to abduct her for horrible experiments. “It's awesome, isn't it? The transfer student's finally here! A transfer student! This is a once-in-a-lifetime chance! Sure, its unfortunate that they're not in our class, but still - definitely an MTS (Mysterious Transfer Student), no doubt about that! A transfer student! Wheeeeeeee!”
I was trying to make her smile, but she just looked more annoyed.
“You've never even met the person, how can you be so sure?”
Aw, come on. At least pay a little bit of attention to things that I say.
"Didn't I tell you? Studies show that a high percentage of students who transfer to schools in the middle of the school term are Mysterious!" Mysterious with a capital M. That's how you know it's important.
Kyon immediately went on a slightly angry rant about the nature of statistics and how transfer students are ridiculously common, but I decided to ignore her. I was too busy being excited about the transfer student.
FLASH
At the end of first period, I bolted out of the classroom at Warp Five, leaving Kyon clutching his head in despair. It only took me five seconds to reach Class 1-9, the new home of the Mysterious Transfer Student.
I kicked open the door. And by “kicked open”, I mean “slid open with enough force that it went flying off its rails and knocked one of the girls in the back row unconscious.”
I grabbed some milquetoast standing nearby and, using my best angry voice, yelled “Where's the transfer student at?!” I think he wet himself, but was too busy yelling to notice.
Milquetoast pointed at a group of girls sitting in the top left corner of the desks, who had been shocked into silence by my impressive and manly voice. I strode over them, making sure to put on my best rape face.
“So...” I said quietly and carefully. “Which one of you is the transfer student?”
Three of the girls were about to faint, but the fourth one calmly raised her hand, as though a scary person wasn't standing right in front of her.
“That would be me. I'm Itsuko Koizumi. Pleased to meet you.”
...! It's the enemy! No, wait, it's an extremely beautiful girl!
Perfect face! Perfect eyes! Perfectly formed lips! A perfect smile Perfect wavy hair! (Needs a ponytail, though. And maybe a big ribbon.) Perfect hands! She's even wearing pantyhose, which is perfect! And... gasp! Barely concealed, barely contained beneath her uniform! Are those... perfect breasts!?
IT'S PERFECT!
This woman is, physically, perfect. That means one of three things. Either she's an esper, a seductive secret agent, or a murdering psychopath.
Any which way you look, she's perfect for my club!
I pull up a nearby chair and sit down with my arms on the backrest, smiling in what I think is a nonchalant way. Time to begin the Questioning Period.
“Koizumi-san, right~?”
She nods. The other girls are backing away. I pretend they don't exist.
“Where are you from?”
“Tokyo Metropolis.”
Damn, I was hoping she'd say something like 'F City, F Prefecture.'
“What's your true identity?”
“A high school student, I believe. Also a woman.”
Hmm. Very normal.
“Are you an alien!?”
“Not since the last time I checked.”
Geh, smooth. Too smooth.
“Koizumi-san, will you marry me!?”
“Now, is that the, ah, sort of question you should be asking at this stage in our relationship, Suzumiya-san? At least wait until the first date...”
...? I didn't introduce myself...
“How could I not have heard of you, Suzumiya-san?” She gives an over-exaggerated shrug. Mysterious. “You are, shall we say... infamous.”
Hmmmmmm.
FLASH
At the next break, leaving Kyon in the dust once again, I ran over to the 1-9 classroom. They'd already fixed the door. How diligent. Oops, there it goes again.
Koizumi-san was talking with her friends again, all of whom were obviously paying less attention to her words and more to her assets. I'm sure she notices, but I don't think she cares.
How Mysterious. Remember, the capital is significant.
I stride across the room, knocking aside desks and chairs and a girl with a bandage on her head in my rampage.
“Koooooizumi-san?”
“Yes, what is it, Suzumiya-san?” Her worshippers had all gone to hide in conspicuous locations.
“I, Haruki Suzumiya, would like to ask you to join my club, the SOS Brigade! Together, we shall conquer the universe!”
In response, she gives me a wicked, foxlike smile.
She's perfect.
FLASH
I kicked open the door. And by “kick open”, I mean “shoved open with extreme prejudice”, since it's kind of awkward to kick open a door while pulling someone along.
“Heeeey guys. Kept ya waiting, didn't I?” I happily interrupted Mitsuuru-kun and Nagato-san's game of Othello. “This is 1-9's new Mysterious Transfer Student! His name is--”
The overly handsome, hairspray commercial introduced himself. To be honest, I really do like this guy, even if he's irritatingly perfect. Since he's only slightly less attractive than I am, he's the perfect person to have as your wingman.
“I'm Itsuki Koizumi. Pleased to meet you all.”
Kyon stood up and spent a moment or two sizing up my new recruit. Itsuki-kun only gave her a brilliant smile, and she blushed noticeably.
I resisted my sudden impulse to throw Itsuki-kun out the window.
"This is the SOS Brigade Club Room! I'm the Commander, Haruki Suzumiya! These are Subordinates One, Two, and Three. That makes you Number Four, so remember to get along!” I waggled a finger at him.
And if you get along a little too well, it's defenestration for you, my boy.
“Well, I don't mind joining, of course... but what kind of club is this?”
Oh. Oh my. He asked. He asked the question. The question that I've been wanting to hear from the very beginning. Ku. Ku ku. Kukukukukukukukuku.
Of course, I had to make the answer up on the spot, since I really haven't given much thought to the answer.
“You didn't know?” I said, pushing up my invisible glasses. "Then let me enlighten you as to the true purpose of the SOS Brigade!"
FLASH
“Ah! Excuse me!”
Of course, walking in on a sight like that would be a surprise to any man, manly or not. I have Asahina-san on the floor, dressed in a maid uniform. I'm molesting her, and Kyon was just about to kick me in the nose when Itsuki-kun showed up.
The true measure of a man is how they deal with this situation.
He looks... puzzled. “Is this some sort of club activity?”
Perfect! “I knew I could count on you, Itsuki-kun! You came at just the right time! I have a job for you!”
Dropping Asahina-san, who I've throughly ruined for marriage, I hasten to whisper my nefarious plot into Itsuki-kun's ear.
“What's going on here?” It's Kyon, who is, of course, suspicious.
“Remember that present I promised you?” I had to promise her something to get her to work on my website a few days ago, although at the time I had no intention of giving her anything... this has changed.
A look of sheer, concentrated, utter, absolute terror passed over Kyon's face. I grabbed a bag in a corner that I had prepared earlier, and pulled out a pair of red bunny ears.
Ku ku ku ku ku HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HAAA!
I laughed inside of my head.
Kyon tried to escape and even threatened me with a rape lawsuit, but I just pushed her into Itsuki-kun, threw him the bag, dragged Yuuki-kun and a sobbing Asahina-san outside, and locked the door behind me.
It wasn't long before I heard the screams. Aaaah. Delicious suffering. It tastes like veal, which also tastes like suffering. And baby cow.
Wait.
Did I just.
Lock Kyon.
Alone.
In a room.
With a guy I barely know?
And who I told to strip and force her into a bunny girl outfit, and that he could cop a feel on the side if he felt like it?
Why did I do that? Why would I do that?
The fact that she's screaming now would imply...
“ITSUKI-KUUUUN!”
I wrench open the door, grab that rat bastard by the collar and the seat of his pants, and chuck him out the window.
Defenestratiooooooon!
CRASH
“You seem to be upset, Suzumiya-san,” Koizumi-san says to me.
I'm not upset. Even if Kyon is all alone, walking somewhere with Mitsuuru-kun. Why would I be upset?
We're in some random park in the middle of town. Koizumi-san and I are sitting on a bench while Nagato-san stares at birds.
“...You don't have a girlfriend, do you?”
I'm a little annoyed by this line of questioning, but I'll let it slide. “I've dated lots and lots of girls... but nah, don't have one currently.”
“...Then,” Koizumi-san looks at me slyly. “...Do you want a girlfriend...?”
...
Hey now.
I paste a grin on my visage. “If you're trying to ask me out, I'm afraid I'm going to have to refuse, pleasant as it would be. I don't want to damage our working relationship.”
She shakes her head. “No, it's not that...”
Oh, good. That would definitely have damaged our working relationship.
Her voice turns deadly serious. “I am asking in objective terms, Suzumiya-san: Do you or do you not want a girlfriend?”
Koizumi-san's eyes are like pools of toxic black liquid. Deadly, but in a strange way, beautiful.
FLASH
We split up again later on... this time, my group consisted of myself, Koizumi-san, and Asahina-san. In other words, Kyon got to go with Yuuki-kun this time.
...I'm not really that upset. If I was upset, I'd be crushing the paper cup my soda came in. ...Oh, wait, I just did that. Must be a reflex.
...The minute she realized she was going to be in a group with me, Asahina-san ran away screaming... it took us all of the time I allotted to catch her.
What a waste of time.
When the three of us got back to the meeting place, however, no one was there, even though it was quarter after four already.
Where the hell are those two!? What on earth are they doing!?
Koizumi-san convinced me to just be patient and wait, but “patient” and “wait” aren't in my dictionary. ...Nonetheless, I did wait fifteen minutes before deciding to call.
“Exactly what time do you think it is now!?”
I'm much, much angrier than I thought I'd be.
“Sorry, I just woke up...”
...
... Just woke up, huh?
Just woke up, eh?
What does that mean, I wonder?
What does it mean?
Damage control.
“What!? Dumbass! Get your ass over here NOW! I'm giving you thirty seconds!”
I hang up abruptly.
“What's going on?” Koizumi-san asks.
...
“She said she had just woken up.”
“...Ah, I see.”
I slump onto the nearby steps. Almost as if sensing my innermost feelings, Koizumi-san puts a hand on my shoulder.
“I'm sure she had just fallen asleep somewhere. I'm sure it's not what you're thinking, Suzumiya-san.”
I brush her away. “I wasn't thinking of anything. I'm just pissed that she has the audacity to be this late!”
I call Kyon a few more times for good measure, but she never picks up.
I live alone in a world full of lies. Despite her best efforts, Koizumi-san will never be able to join me there.
I like being alone.
FLASH
I'm an idiot. Well, I already knew that, but this just further proves my idiocy.
I opened myself up completely to Kyon today. I laid bare all of my frustrations. That was a mistake.
By voicing them to someone else, my fear, anger, and melancholy have all gained substance. My lies are made manifest.
I'm surrounded, trapped by my own turmoil on all sides.
The vibration of my cellphone snaps me back to the reality of the uncomfortable telephone I'm leaning against.
It's a text message from... Koizumi-san, of all people? What she doing, sending me something like this?
Suzumiya-san,
I joined your club because of how impressed I was by your determination to succeed at a goal that most people would consider insane. A goal that I, as part of your wonderful club, now share.
I am sorry. I'm having trouble expressing myself.
What I mean to say is this: As long as you believe in something strongly enough, it will, without fail, come true. I can guarantee this much.
If you believe strongly that one day you will meet aliens, time travellers, and espers, one day, you will find them. And if you believe strongly that one day you will discover true love... I have faith that you'll succeed.
Although there are times when it might seem impossible, I urge you: Never give up on your dreams.
Itsuko<3
...Who writes text messages in the style of letters? At least send this sort of thing by email.
...Sigh. Thank you, Koizumi-san. Thank you so much.
But it's too late now. I've already given up on one dream, and the other is soon to follow.
...
...
...
Still. I think this can be a tiny shard of light in the middle of my darkness.
...I think Koizumi-san deserves a promotion for this.
I get up and stretch. Enough moping around for one day.
I cross the road and get hit by a black taxi cab.
CRASH
I wake up on the sidewalk, apparently unharmed. Except for the fact that I'm a woman.
I spend about five minutes causing various physical injuries to myself before I'm sure that it isn't a dream.
So... in this situation, what should I do...? I guess I'll try contacting someone and see if they know a way to return myself to normal. ...Koizumi-san seems like she'd know about this kind of thing.
I call, but an unknown man answers, addressing me as “Suzumiya-san”. I hang up out of apprehension.
Already, I suspect what's happening, but... to make sure, I call the others.
Same deal. I call Mitsuuru-kun. Some girl answers, knows who I am, I hang up. I call Yuuki. There's no response other than light breathing, so I hang up.
I call Kyon's cell. Some pissed-off sounding guy answers, calls me 'Haruhi', and tells me not to bother him any more today.
I hang up, but he calls me back.
...He sounds worried, and asks where I am. He'll be right there, he says.
He must have detected the fear in my womanly voice.
I throw my pink cellphone into the garbage, and return home.
My parents are people I don't know.
I greet them causally, then go into my room.
...It's much the same as it always is, except for the underwear. At least there are some constants in the world.
I don't want to live like this.
I've spent my whole life looking for change, for something exciting to do, and when thing are finally different... I want them to be the same.
How horribly ironic.
I just want to die.
I fish around in my skirt pocket for something to kill myself with. Maybe I carry a taser.
No, it's just a silver tube of lipstick.
...No wait. It's not a tube of lipstick. It's a handgun. And it's already loaded. How convenient.
Mechanically, I slowly raise the gun up... and point the barrel at the bottom of my chin.
It's ice cold. The barrel, not my chin.
Centimeter by centimeter, I squeeze the trigger.
The distinct noise of a gunshot is the last sound that I will leave behind.
FLASH
Always remember: What is true for the one is true for the other.
Kiss kiss. Bang bang.
FLASH
And then I “wake up”.
Some of Haruki's lines seem truly emo, even for him; but it works, overall.
Maybe the Sunday supernatural hunt scenes could be extended to Haruki discussing music with Itsuko, if you know what I mean. But then again, things might be too obvious.
Look forward to knowing what really happened. Could be Itsuki with his derringer, trying to rescue Kyon. Maybe the shot had come from the grassy knoll instead.
Some of Haruki's lines seem truly emo, even for him; but it works, overall.
Maybe the Sunday supernatural hunt scenes could be extended to Haruki discussing music with Itsuko, if you know what I mean. But then again, things might be too obvious.
Haruki IS emo. Who else freakin' destroys WORLDS just 'cuz they're unhappy? Haruki (and Haruhi I guess)
On a side note, no, I don't know what you mean :heh:
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-14, 09:59
Who else freakin' destroys WORLDS just 'cuz they're unhappy?
Well, it's better than destroying them out of boredom. :heh:
@s07195: then there'd be no story :heh:
Is this VN 30-40% complete?
@s07195: then there'd be no story :heh:
Is this VN 30-40% complete?
No. By any means. Do you know the concept of routes? If we assume each route will be as long as the first week, then the script alone isn't even 15% complete.
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-14, 12:50
I should hope that most are quite a bit longer than the first week, seeing as this is supposed to span most of the month. Saying the script is anywhere near 15% completed is probably too generous. :heh:
Magnificate
2010-01-14, 19:31
I didn't know there would be more content than one week. I mean, the flowchart suggests the climax would be at Day 6 and at best Day 7 for wrap up.
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-14, 19:52
The demo that Kaisos wants to put out will only be the first week. Full thing spans most of the month.
The demo that Kaisos wants to put out will only be the first week. Full thing spans most of the month.
:twitch: so all this work is for a DEMO?
Sure hope the real thing will be for free....
Now I understand how this VN took over the whole thread...
edkedkedk
2010-01-14, 21:59
I have read a few of the scripts and I'm a little confused as to the nature of this project. Is this going to be a fan-made anime? Or a game? I thought it was written as a very good piece of fan-fic, but what with all the sprites, artwork and even CG shots have proved me wrong :heh:
Iaevuous
2010-01-14, 22:11
It will be a visual novel written on the Ren'Py engine.
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-14, 23:43
:twitch: so all this work is for a DEMO?
Sure hope the real thing will be for free....
Everything that's been posted so far will be in the full version, the demo is just so that there will be something to show for all the effort that's going into this. And as far as I know, this is going to be free. At the very least, I know I won't be getting any money for this. :heh:
edkedkedk
2010-01-15, 02:41
Everything that's been posted so far will be in the full version, the demo is just so that there will be something to show for all the effort that's going into this. And as far as I know, this is going to be free. At the very least, I know I won't be getting any money for this. :heh:
Oh my. If this is gonna be anything like Suzumiya Haruhi no Yakusoku for the PSP, I'll have to say that this is impressive. It's gonna need awesome game programmers, story writers and artists to pull this off, which from the looks of things, is already a given :hyper-^v^:
If there's anything I could do I would offer my help, but seeing how I don't have much expertise in those areas, I won't be of much help :T_T:
Kaisos Erranon
2010-01-15, 03:23
Bello Resurrectio
I said “wake up” because what I simply did was regain consciousness... my eyes have been open all this time.
It's a very strange feeling, like being instantly transported from one place to another. A moment ago, I was seeing the ceiling of some dark room, and now... I'm looking at the river. Also, my cheek hurts a lot.
...Wait, hold on, let's take stock of the situation here. What happened?
a) I decided to sell Haruhi's demon-possessed headphones.
b) I ran into a beautiful woman who turned out to be a kitsune in disguise.
c) She shot me.
d) I passed out for headphone-related reasons and had a dream I can't remember.
e) I'm now sitting on the ground facing the river, under the shade of a cherry tree.
f) It's nearly sunset, and my head is resting on a comfortable pillow.
Sounds like a normal day by my life's standards.
So, what happened while I was out this time? Who laid me down and put this pillow under me? I doubt it was the kitsune-- wait, this isn't a pillow. I can feel a strong heartbeat reverberating in the back of my skull, and it's far softer than any pillow I've ever slept on. Therefore, this must be a
Kyon: Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhh!
I yell, roll forward, and flip around. Yamada, the kitsune, was sitting there, smiling, like always.
I am strongly reminded of Ryoko Asakura.
Itsuko: You're awake, I see. Please, calm down... I would like to apologize.
And that's when her face finally changes. It becomes... ambivalent.
Itsuko: I'm... ashamed of how I acted earlier. I hope you can forgive me.
My first instinct was to run far away, but it's that expression which halts me. She seems... sincere.
I'll stay and listen, even thought this might just be another trap.
Itsuko: I-I am sorry for many things I have done to you today, but especially for the damage to the side of your face...
Side of my...?
I reach up and touch my right cheek, which had been covered by a bandage... it hurt like hell.
Itsuko: Ah, you shouldn't worry, it's only a graze... it should heal up fine in a couple of days... but please, don't remove the bandage, whatever you do. And, ah, h-how does it feel?
I'm very confused. First the woman tries to seduce me, then she shoots me, and now she just spent the last...
(I check my watch. I've been unconscious for two hours.)
...Two hours treating my wound and then letting me sleep on her? I will never understand this girl.
I might just be falling into her trap again, but at the least, I'd like to know what's been going on.
Kyon: I don't mean to be rude, but I'd like to begin a Question Period of my own... and I'd like some answers.
Yamada stares at me as though to gauge my intentions.
Itsuko: ...I have no right to refuse, but... after I explain everything... would you answer my final question?
Kyon: Deal.
...So... what should I ask first?
I felt like teasing her a little to get back for everything she did today. It's a childish form of revenge, but it's also a satisfying one.
Kyon: Hmm, Question One:
Let's see, something embarrassing...
I hear a very faint noise from what seems like very far away.
Kyon: How many guys have you kissed?
Itsuko: Huh?
Did... did she just blush a little? ...Must have really caught her off guard.
Itsuko: Well, let me see...
Wait, she's answering seriously? T-that was a joke, Yamada-san.
Itsuko: There was the three back then... and the time when I did when he was asleep... and I suppose today counts... so... five?
...Hm. Well, a lot less than I expected, to be honest... hold on, today? What happened today?
Itsuko: Could I, ah, have the next question, please? I don't mean to rush you, of course...
...
Kyon: Sorry... that last one was a joke...
And one in fairly poor taste, come to think of it.
Kyon: I'll seriously start now. Question Two! ...What's your true identity?
Itsuko: ......Eh?
Are you going to act surprised at all my questions!?
Itsuko: No, it's nothing. ...I am who you think I am: Itsuko Koizumi, an esper, your close friend Itsuki's cousin, and a member of the Agency.
...Close friend? Is that what he's telling people?
Kyon: ...I kind of doubt the Agency would order you to hold me up at gunpoint and threaten to shoot me if I didn't comply.
Unfortunately, I think I'm far too important for that. Very unfortunately.
Itsuko: ...I was not under orders. I was acting on my own.
Kyon: So I guess that brings me to my Question Three: What were your intentions back there? Why did you trap me like that in the first place?
I should probably be a lot angrier, but Yamada's face is defusing my indignation... Am I really this weak to pretty girls?
Itsuko: I did say before, but... perhaps it was too stressful a time for you to be paying much attention. No, I will rephrase that, it definitely was. ...My intentions involved these.
She holds up my headphones, which I guess she'd taken off while I was asleep.
Kyon: ...You wanted to steal my headphones?
She shakes her head.
Itsuko: To begin with, they're not your headphones. They belong to a friend of mine. The English inscribed inside it is his, shall we say, signature.
...Huh. I guess I was off completely about it representing kanji characters, then.
Itsuko: ...He's a very important person to me, and to all my friends. He is... missing... right now... and when I saw you in that store, wearing his headphones, and even dressed like him, I... became a bit paranoid... perhaps too much so.
Well, the scar that's going to form on my cheek is a testament to that.
At my words, Yamada stands up and... bows to me. H-hold on, that's a bit...
Itsuko: ...Please forgive me for my foolishness... At least, I hope you can...
...
1)Forgive her.
2)Of course I'll forgive her.
I stand up too.
Kyon: Of course I'll forgive you...
I still don't really understand, but I guess that's enough.
Itsuko: ...Thank you.
And she smiles for the first time.
Itsuko: Is that all the questions, or...
Kyon: Nope, I'm finished.
I think I can be satisfied with this.
Itsuko: Well, then, I think I will--
Kyon: Wait, I still haven't answered your final question.
Itsuko: No, no, it is fine, you may have your secrets.
Kyon: It's only fair this way, right?
Itsuko: ...Hmm, yes, that's true.
...She doesn't need to hear about the hallucinating and comas... she hasn't even asked about why I passed out earlier... she must think it was due to shock or something.
Kyon: The headphones and that music player were delivered to my room with a note saying “Happy Birthday” on it.
Itsuko: ...Was it your birthday that day?
Kyon: No, my birthday is--
A large truck passed by on the nearby road, drowning out my next words. I wish that would stop happening.
Itsuko: How odd...
Kyon: You're telling me.
Yamada holds out the headphones, urging me to take them, but...
Kyon: You keep them. They're important to you, right?
I don't ever want to see them again to be honest.
Itsuko: That's correct, yes. Hmm, I suppose I must give you something in return, then.
She reaches into her pocket and throws me... a shiny silver tube!?
Itsuko: Trade?
Kyon: Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhh!
Yamada holds her ears.
Itsuko: Please don't yell like that, Kyon-kun. You'll scare the passing lovers.
Kyon: What... what...
Itsuko: It's only an ordinary tube of lipstick... there was no gun to begin with. I was only pretending to be a femme fatale. It's a dream I've held since I was little... I'm sorry.
I pick it up off the ground, and gingerly open it. ...Just like she says, a perfectly ordinary tube of lipstick.
...It doesn't look the least bit threatening. I was nearly wetting myself over this?
Kyon: Why are you giving it to me?
Itsuko: A souvenir?
Both of us burst out laughing.
When we recovered, it was about time to separate.
Itsuko: I do have a final request, if you'll listen.
Kyon: Sure... what is it?
Itsuko: I'm tired of fake names. ...Please, call me by my real one.
Kyon: ...Well, I can't call you “Koizumi”, since that's what I call your cousin.
And it'd get pretty confusing if I was talking to both of them at the same time.
Ah, I've got it.
Kyon: How about “Koizumi-san”?
Itsuko: ....................................
Kyon: ...No good?
Itsuko: Ah! Er, no, that's fine. It's perfect. I am “Koizumi-san” from now on. ...Well then, I bid you good day, Kyon-kun.
But just as I turn away...
Itsuko: Oh, it almost escaped my mind... Since we'll be schoolmates from now on, would you like to eat lunch together on Monday?
Kyon: ...Yeah, sure. Why not? I'll see you then.
Although we'll probably have to do it somewhere Haruhi won't be.
Good day to you too, Koizumi-san.
---
I got home far earlier than the rest of my family, so I was able to disguise the fact that I had gone out at all... except for the bandage on my face, which I inconveniently forgot about until right before they walked in the door.
I made up some lame excuse about falling down the stairs, but my mother's worrywart mode was still activated.
As a result, dinner was a nightmare. It consisted of my mother telling me over and over that I need to be more careful, while my sister casually mentioned that she hoped my wound would turn into a big scar, since it'd “look cool”.
I managed to get away by saying that I had homework to do (which is true), but both a horrible realization and a horrible feeling were waiting for me at the door to my room.
The horrible realization was this: If Koizumi-san's lipstick gun was just a tube of lipstick she pretened was a gun... [i]why do I have a bullet wound on my face?
The horrible feeling was this: Dread. Dread that something even more horrible would be waiting for me when I opened the door in front of me.
I was depressingly correct.
Those headphones were sitting neatly on my pillow, the xPod sitting just as neatly next to them, alongside a note, written in curving, girly characters.
“Kyon-kun,
Sorry for breaking into your house, but I figured you'd be better off holding onto these. After all, you need to have your sweet dreams every night, right?
Right?
Itsuko <3”
Ohohohohohohohoho.
I'll get around to answering the backlog of posts I need to respond to tomorrow. For now, please enjoy the scene.
edkedkedk
2010-01-15, 03:46
Bellus Resurrectio
Unfortunately, I think I'm far too important for that. Very unfortunately.
Kyon finally admits his importance as the center of the universe. This part made me smile :smile:
Bellus Resurrectio
The horrible realization was this: If Koizumi-san's lipstick gun was just a tube of lipstick she pretened was a gun... why do I have a bullet wound on my face?
The horrible feeling was this: Dread. Dread that something even more horrible would be waiting for me when I opened the door in front of me.
Yet another mystery, yet another cliffhanger. Boy oh boy, you sure are good at 'em! :heh:
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-15, 07:56
1)Forgive her.
2)Of course I'll forgive her.
Normally, I'd complain about something like this, but it's probably in character in this case. :heh:
Kyon: The headphones and that music player were delivered to my room with a note saying “Happy Birthday” on it.
Itsuko: ...Was it your birthday that day?
Kyon: No, my birthday is--
A large truck passed by on the nearby road, drowning out my next words. I wish that would stop happening.
Itsuko: How odd...
Kyon: You're telling me.
Funny.
I made up some lame excuse about falling down the stairs
Silly Kyon, that only results in comas... or broken bones.
“Kyon-[i]kun,
Sorry for breaking into your house, but I figured you'd be better off holding onto these. After all, you need to have your sweet dreams every night, right?
Right?
Itsuko <3”
Well this is certainly an amusing twist on these. :heh:
No Way to Get Away
I wake up to the sound of a shower somewhere close by.
I'm... still in Nagato's apartment... and I have no idea what just happened.
...The headphones! Of course. It's always the headphones. Curse those things.
They're not, however, on my head at all... in fact, they're nowhere in sight. Neither is Nagato, although given the sound in the background, she's... probably in the shower.
As I sit up, a wool blanket slides off my shoulders. She must have put this on me after I passed out.
...
It's getting dark outside ...How long was I out for...? I check my watch.
Six twenty-three. ...Four hours!? I have to get home! ...Except that, if I leave now... I can see Nagato tracking me down out of misplaced concern.
I'll just wait for her to finish and-- oh look, here she is now. Wearing nothing but a bath towel.
Kyon: ...Uh.
...Well. That's uh. Huh.
She blinks.
Yuki: You are awake. ...I apologize.
Kyon: ...For what?
Seriously, you haven't done anything wrong at all. I mean it. Everything's perfectly fine right now. Seriously.
Argh.
Yuki: ...For many things.
...
Nagato heads into her room, sliding the door shut behind her. She returns only a few minutes later, clad once again in her school uniform. She sits opposite me, as though nothing had happened at all.
Yuki: Your headphones were emitting a powerful spatial distortion of the type detected on September the Fourth. I was unable to completely identify them until they were placed upon my head.
Kyon: Wait, wait, hold on. Who did that?
Blink.
Yuki: You did.
Kyon: ...?
I don't remember doing anything like that at all, but I wouldn't be surprised. In that case, I should be the one making apologies...
Yuki: In the interests of safety, the headphones and their music player have been destroyed. That is one reason why I am apologizing.
Kyon: Oh thank god.
I've been looking for a way to get rid of those for ages. Thank you, Nagato. What can I possibly do to repay you?
Yuki: ...Stay for dinner...
Kyon: Huh? What was that, Nagato?
Yuki: You have no need to thank me. It was simply in the interests of--
Kyon: Safety, yeah.
Silence.
Kyon: Well, I... it's really late, and... I need to be going. I'll see you around, Nagato.
Even if you don't want it, I'll still give you my thanks.
Yuki: ...
She nods. I show myself to the door.
I get the vague sense of a wasted opportunity, a possibility that could have been.
Looking back, Nagato seems lonely.
...Deja vu.
---
I missed dinner. My mother, although not visibly upset, still made me clean up the kitchen while my sister mocked me. What a wonderful family life.
Afterward, I dragged my sore body upstairs, only to find a horrible surprise waiting for me.
Those headphones were sitting neatly on my pillow, the xPod sitting just as neatly next to them, alongside a note, written in characters so perfect they look like a computer printout.
“Not even she can save you now.”
Yeah, most of these need some work, but that's why I post them up here, and I have good news!
We're over the bloody hump! Now I can write about the characters I actually care about.
I've been away from this thread for too long, and now I need to play catch-up. ^^; But while I am catching up, I wanted to compliment you on your excellent writing. The ending is very creepy; I loved it.
Kyon: How many guys have you kissed?
Itsuko: There was the three back then... and the time when I did when he was asleep... and I suppose today counts... so... five?
OMG she kissed him while he's sleeping (@Itsuko: Good job)
edkedkedk
2010-01-15, 12:12
OMG she kissed him while he's sleeping (@Itsuko: Good job)
I don't think she did... See, there was three she definitely kissed, then she said 'and the time when I did when he was asleep' to Kyon, which most probably meant she kissed another guy while he was asleep, and finally the incident today, making a total of 5 guys (Three dudes, Asleep guy, Kyon).
Stormwhite
2010-01-15, 12:49
Pretty sure Kaisos said that one of said three guys is Mori o_O
Would the asleep one be Haruki? Or am I reading too much into this?
Pretty sure Kaisos said that one of said three guys is Mori o_O
I don't know that it was ever explicitly stated, but it has been pretty heavily implied, given Mori's (m) obsession with Itsuko and the Power of Love.
I've been away from this thread for too long, and now I need to play catch-up. ^^; But while I am catching up, I wanted to compliment you on your excellent writing. The ending is very creepy; I loved it.
Yes, you have been. The thread calls for more excellent Setsubuun!
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-15, 14:39
OMG she kissed him while he's sleeping (@Itsuko: Good job)
You forgot already? Here's a reminder :p
...Her lips are only a centimeter away...I put my arms around her and close the gap that's a centimeter wide.
Kaisos Erranon
2010-01-15, 18:31
Comments time.
Also, I did update the KOIZUMI Memories and 'Supermodel', if anyone's interested.
'Dolus of Honey' is something you could expect someone to understand without knowing lots of Latin, whereas Dolus Mellis...is not.
It's actually sort of a play on words. "Dolus" is literally "fraud", but the word can also mean "trap". A honey trap, in this case.
So, as you can see, I just made a new archive post. CandaAotS vanished suddenly, so I took his place. Sorry, Canada, if you come back you can back to it if you preffer. J I copied shamelessly his post, because it was really good, and pretty. Just added the spoiler tags to make it shorther.
Heatth, you're a badass. Thanks for all the hard work.
Also, about Itsuko's scene, I fell Kyon over describe her. It is a VN, so it is not really necessery as she have a sprite. Specially now Kaisos said he changed his plans for them. I also think she should say at last "hi" to Kyon first.
Kyon's overdescription emphasizes how hot he is for her. It stays.
Of course this can change eventually in the course of the NV (this for all girls, I guess)
As soon as he's in a real relationship with them, yeah. Although he starts calling Kyonko "Nayuki" right off the bat...
Of course, it could just be artistic license. Or that the Kiss of Death fires at subsonic speed (I was unable to find any information on its firing speed).
I don't normally do artistic license, except in the Memories sequences where I can do whatever I want, given who's narrating them.
And I'm relatively sure that, as an old and unwieldly weapon, the Kiss of Death is subsonic. Not that it matters.
I don't know what to say...
And I live for reactions like this.
Or maybe it's not a firearm at all. Not sure how you'd sneak one into Japan.
Mori is paramilitary, Arakawa is retired military. It wouldn't be hard for either of them to get ahold of something like that.
It's Mori's, by the way. Why he has something that feminine I don't know, but...
Anyway, yeah, cliffhanger sucks. Trolling authors are even worse. :p
Aren't they, though?
I am pretty sure we are going to have a Tiger Dojo of sorts. Last time I heared something about it Kaisos and Danchou were still discussing who would actually be in there.
First death is on Day 6. And as for a Dojo-of-sorts, I'm currently considering Disappearance Itsuki and Haruhi. In fact, that's what I'll probably go with.
For the "distinctive", I guess he was talking about the sound guns do in movies. I know it is not the same sound, but chances are Kaisos just don't care. :p
Don't real guns sound something like fireworks? In any case, Kyon DOES know what a real gunshot sounds like. He knows the most random things.
Haruki, on the other hand...
I'm sure if the writers of the various routes had their way, he'd make it a lot farther than that. :heh:
I do believe I mentioned PG-13 sex, right? :heh: I think the only women Kyon DOESN'T sleep with are Mori and Big Mikuru.
Itsuko was probably only using a regular tube of lipstick.
This. Perhaps.
I really love your Haruki, Kaisos. I may have to send him chocolates for Valentine's Day.
Make sure they're good chocolates. And try to get some shaped like alien heads.
Oh, yeah, your Haruki is awesome, but I think it is a good thing he don't exist. He is complete dangerous jerk. You can't defenestrate people just for doing what you told them to do. :p
Sure you can. That's the Suzumiya way!
But I really doubt Haruki will kill himself straight after he found out his gender change. I mean, this is a mysterious event, one that he has been looking for all his life, and he immediately throws it all away by offing himself? A little weird...
You're correct, but that scene is fake anyway.
I still added a bit more justification to it, though. Give it a look.
Here, I have to applaud your restraint from making Itsuko yandere.
I will probably never ruin Itsuko.
Maybe the Sunday supernatural hunt scenes could be extended to Haruki discussing music with Itsuko, if you know what I mean. But then again, things might be too obvious.
There'll be a flashback scene later in the Esper route dealing with Itsuko and Haruki, actually.
I should hope that most are quite a bit longer than the first week, seeing as this is supposed to span most of the month. Saying the script is anywhere near 15% completed is probably too generous. :heh:
Most of the routes have less content per-day than the first week does. The first week is ALL flagbuilding and setup, which is why it's so bloody dense.
Sure hope the real thing will be for free....
This is a doujin. We can't sell this, as the copyright owners will kill us. It'll be free, although I hope to create an original VN in the future.
Would the asleep one be Haruki? Or am I reading too much into this?
It's Haruki. Remember that time he was sleeping on the roof in Endless Eight? Yeah.
Yet another mystery, yet another cliffhanger. Boy oh boy, you sure are good at 'em! :heh:
Thanks. This isn't normal, by the way. I was just inspired. :heh:
I don't know that it was ever explicitly stated, but it has been pretty heavily implied, given Mori's (m) obsession with Itsuko and the Power of Love.
It was Mori, yeah.
Anyway, it would be great to see more speculation on where all of this is going and what it all means, but it's fine either way. :heh:
Working on the Kyonko scenes eventually.
Apologies for the non sequitur, but ... HOLY QUOTE POST, BATMAN! o_o ... ^^ Impressive.
Iaevuous
2010-01-15, 18:58
From what I can tell, resurrectio is feminine, so shouldn't it be "Bella Resurrectio"?
Kaisos Erranon
2010-01-15, 19:29
From what I can tell, resurrectio is feminine, so shouldn't it be "Bella Resurrectio"?
I have no fucking idea, I just stuck latin words I translated online together.
Sounds good, though. Thanks.
Changed.
Ricky Controversy
2010-01-15, 19:31
Resurrectio would be a masculine ending, but that's not the real issue here. The real issue is that the word for 'resurrection' in actual Latin instead of Latinese would be Resurgum.
So you'd want Bellum Resurgum.
Iaevuous
2010-01-15, 21:24
Resurrectio would be a masculine ending, but that's not the real issue here. The real issue is that the word for 'resurrection' in actual Latin instead of Latinese would be Resurgum.
So you'd want Bellum Resurgum.
Huh. My source calls it "Ecclesiastical Latin 3rd Declension Feminine". It also offers "resurgum" and "anastasis" on the subject of "resurrection".
Anyway, what Ricky says is probably better. I'm still just learning the language.
The only dead-tree Latin sources I have are ones from school, which --- to paraphrase my teacher --- are illegally outdated.
Kaisos Erranon
2010-01-15, 21:28
I was after another word entirely, not "resurrection". "Resurrectio" just happens to mean "awakening", but looks like a certain English word... completely intentional, I assure you. Of course, I don't know how the language works, but...
Thank you both anyway.
dragon4dudes
2010-01-15, 22:09
Reminder: "..." means insert text here, "...." means trailing off....
Reminder: "..." means insert text here, "...." means trailing off....
Even if true, no one uses it like that.
dragon4dudes
2010-01-15, 22:29
I do.... Is that bad?
I do.... Is that bad?
Not bad... just unique.
dragon4dudes
2010-01-15, 23:04
Before we go too far into random off-topicness....
Nice scene Kaisos.
Bello Resurrectio
I said “wake up” because what I simply did was regain consciousness... my eyes have been open all this time.
It's a very strange feeling, like being instantly transported from one place to another. A moment ago, I was seeing the ceiling of some dark room, and now... I'm looking at the river. Also, my cheek hurts a lot.
...Wait, hold on, let's take stock of the situation here. What happened?
a) I decided to sell Haruhi's demon-possessed headphones.
b) I ran into a beautiful woman who turned out to be a kitsune in disguise.
c) She shot me.
d) I passed out for headphone-related reasons and had a dream I can't remember.
e) I'm now sitting on the ground facing the river, under the shade of a cherry tree.
f) It's nearly sunset, and my head is resting on a comfortable pillow.
Sounds like a normal day by my life's standards.
So, what happened while I was out this time? Who laid me down and put this pillow under me? I doubt it was the kitsune-- wait, this isn't a pillow. I can feel a strong heartbeat reverberating in the back of my skull, and it's far softer than any pillow I've ever slept on. Therefore, this must be a
Kyon: Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhh!
I yell, roll forward, and flip around. Yamada, the kitsune, was sitting there, smiling, like always.
I am strongly reminded of Ryoko Asakura.
Itsuko: You're awake, I see. Please, calm down... I would like to apologize.
And that's when her face finally changes. It becomes... ambivalent.
Itsuko: I'm... ashamed of how I acted earlier. I hope you can forgive me.
My first instinct was to run far away, but it's that expression which halts me. She seems... sincere.
I'll stay and listen, even thought this might just be another trap.
Itsuko: I-I am sorry for many things I have done to you today, but especially for the damage to the side of your face...
Side of my...?
I reach up and touch my right cheek, which had been covered by a bandage... it hurt like hell.
Itsuko: Ah, you shouldn't worry, it's only a graze... it should heal up fine in a couple of days... but please, don't remove the bandage, whatever you do. And, ah, h-how does it feel?
I'm very confused. First the woman tries to seduce me, then she shoots me, and now she just spent the last...
(I check my watch. I've been unconscious for two hours.)
...Two hours treating my wound and then letting me sleep on her? I will never understand this girl.
I might just be falling into her trap again, but at the least, I'd like to know what's been going on.
Kyon: I don't mean to be rude, but I'd like to begin a Question Period of my own... and I'd like some answers.
Yamada stares at me as though to gauge my intentions.
Itsuko: ...I have no right to refuse, but... after I explain everything... would you answer my final question?
Kyon: Deal.
...So... what should I ask first?
I felt like teasing her a little to get back for everything she did today. It's a childish form of revenge, but it's also a satisfying one.
Kyon: Hmm, Question One:
Let's see, something embarrassing...
I hear a very faint noise from what seems like very far away.
Kyon: How many guys have you kissed?
Itsuko: Huh?
Did... did she just blush a little? ...Must have really caught her off guard.
Itsuko: Well, let me see...
Wait, she's answering seriously? T-that was a joke, Yamada-san.
Itsuko: There was the three back then... and the time when I did when he was asleep... and I suppose today counts... so... five?
...Hm. Well, a lot less than I expected, to be honest... hold on, today? What happened today?
Itsuko: Could I, ah, have the next question, please? I don't mean to rush you, of course...
...
Kyon: Sorry... that last one was a joke...
And one in fairly poor taste, come to think of it.
Kyon: I'll seriously start now. Question Two! ...What's your true identity?
Itsuko: ......Eh?
Are you going to act surprised at all my questions!?
Itsuko: No, it's nothing. ...I am who you think I am: Itsuko Koizumi, an esper, your close friend Itsuki's cousin, and a member of the Agency.
...Close friend? Is that what he's telling people?
Kyon: ...I kind of doubt the Agency would order you to hold me up at gunpoint and threaten to shoot me if I didn't comply.
Unfortunately, I think I'm far too important for that. Very unfortunately.
Itsuko: ...I was not under orders. I was acting on my own.
Kyon: So I guess that brings me to my Question Three: What were your intentions back there? Why did you trap me like that in the first place?
I should probably be a lot angrier, but Yamada's face is defusing my indignation... Am I really this weak to pretty girls?
Itsuko: I did say before, but... perhaps it was too stressful a time for you to be paying much attention. No, I will rephrase that, it definitely was. ...My intentions involved these.
She holds up my headphones, which I guess she'd taken off while I was asleep.
Kyon: ...You wanted to steal my headphones?
She shakes her head.
Itsuko: To begin with, they're not your headphones. They belong to a friend of mine. The English inscribed inside it is his, shall we say, signature.
...Huh. I guess I was off completely about it representing kanji characters, then.
Itsuko: ...He's a very important person to me, and to all my friends. He is... missing... right now... and when I saw you in that store, wearing his headphones, and even dressed like him, I... became a bit paranoid... perhaps too much so.
Well, the scar that's going to form on my cheek is a testament to that.
At my words, Yamada stands up and... bows to me. H-hold on, that's a bit...
Itsuko: ...Please forgive me for my foolishness... At least, I hope you can...
...
1)Forgive her.
2)Of course I'll forgive her.
I stand up too.
Kyon: Of course I'll forgive you...
I still don't really understand, but I guess that's enough.
Itsuko: ...Thank you.
And she smiles for the first time.
Itsuko: Is that all the questions, or...
Kyon: Nope, I'm finished.
I think I can be satisfied with this.
Itsuko: Well, then, I think I will--
Kyon: Wait, I still haven't answered your final question.
Itsuko: No, no, it is fine, you may have your secrets.
Kyon: It's only fair this way, right?
Itsuko: ...Hmm, yes, that's true.
...She doesn't need to hear about the hallucinating and comas... she hasn't even asked about why I passed out earlier... she must think it was due to shock or something.
Kyon: The headphones and that music player were delivered to my room with a note saying “Happy Birthday” on it.
Itsuko: ...Was it your birthday that day?
Kyon: No, my birthday is--
A large truck passed by on the nearby road, drowning out my next words. I wish that would stop happening.
Itsuko: How odd...
Kyon: You're telling me.
Yamada holds out the headphones, urging me to take them, but...
Kyon: You keep them. They're important to you, right?
I don't ever want to see them again to be honest.
Itsuko: That's correct, yes. Hmm, I suppose I must give you something in return, then.
She reaches into her pocket and throws me... a shiny silver tube!?
Itsuko: Trade?
Kyon: Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhh!
Yamada holds her ears.
Itsuko: Please don't yell like that, Kyon-kun. You'll scare the passing lovers.
Kyon: What... what...
Itsuko: It's only an ordinary tube of lipstick... there was no gun to begin with. I was only pretending to be a femme fatale. It's a dream I've held since I was little... I'm sorry.
I pick it up off the ground, and gingerly open it. ...Just like she says, a perfectly ordinary tube of lipstick.
...It doesn't look the least bit threatening. I was nearly wetting myself over this?
Kyon: Why are you giving it to me?
Itsuko: A souvenir?
Both of us burst out laughing.
When we recovered, it was about time to separate.
Itsuko: I do have a final request, if you'll listen.
Kyon: Sure... what is it?
Itsuko: I'm tired of fake names. ...Please, call me by my real one.
Kyon: ...Well, I can't call you “Koizumi”, since that's what I call your cousin.
And it'd get pretty confusing if I was talking to both of them at the same time.
Ah, I've got it.
Kyon: How about “Koizumi-san”?
Itsuko: ....................................
Kyon: ...No good?
Itsuko: Ah! Er, no, that's fine. It's perfect. I am “Koizumi-san” from now on. ...Well then, I bid you good day, Kyon-kun.
But just as I turn away...
Itsuko: Oh, it almost escaped my mind... Since we'll be schoolmates from now on, would you like to eat lunch together on Monday?
Kyon: ...Yeah, sure. Why not? I'll see you then.
Although we'll probably have to do it somewhere Haruhi won't be.
Good day to you too, Koizumi-san.
---
I got home far earlier than the rest of my family, so I was able to disguise the fact that I had gone out at all... except for the bandage on my face, which I inconveniently forgot about until right before they walked in the door.
I made up some lame excuse about falling down the stairs, but my mother's worrywart mode was still activated.
As a result, dinner was a nightmare. It consisted of my mother telling me over and over that I need to be more careful, while my sister casually mentioned that she hoped my wound would turn into a big scar, since it'd “look cool”.
I managed to get away by saying that I had homework to do (which is true), but both a horrible realization and a horrible feeling were waiting for me at the door to my room.
The horrible realization was this: If Koizumi-san's lipstick gun was just a tube of lipstick she pretened was a gun... [i]why do I have a bullet wound on my face?
The horrible feeling was this: Dread. Dread that something even more horrible would be waiting for me when I opened the door in front of me.
I was depressingly correct.
Those headphones were sitting neatly on my pillow, the xPod sitting just as neatly next to them, alongside a note, written in curving, girly characters.
“Kyon-kun,
Sorry for breaking into your house, but I figured you'd be better off holding onto these. After all, you need to have your sweet dreams every night, right?
Right?
Itsuko <3”
Ohohohohohohohoho.
I'll get around to answering the backlog of posts I need to respond to tomorrow. For now, please enjoy the scene.
This is a great scene. I'll have to say Kyon really doesn't get Itsuko at all. He doesn't seem to be able to ascribe any emotion from Itsuko. Fear, anger, melancholy, those he should have been felt something from her, especially since what happened is pretty hard on the nerves. Maybe all his empathy was reserved for Yuki? :heh:
Kyon's empathy: For Nagato Yuki's use only.
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-16, 08:20
She's basically a female Itsuki. Why are you surprised Kyon can't figure her out? :heh:
beanbrew
2010-01-16, 08:50
Demon-possessed headphones? I really should go back and read the rest of the VN days so far. It's pretty confusing starting in the middle.:heh:
Reminder: "..." means insert text here, "...." means trailing off....
In legal documents, you use ". . ." if a words are omitted from the middle of a quote and ". . . ." if words are omitted from the end of a quote. You never use anything if you omit words from the beginning.
Bello Resurrectio
I made up some lame excuse about falling down the stairs, but my mother's worrywart mode was still activated.
Hah, great Disappearance reference here :D
dragon4dudes
2010-01-16, 13:35
Screw legal documents.
Bello Resurrectio
I said “wake up” because what I simply did was regain consciousness... my eyes have been open all this time.
It's a very strange feeling, like being instantly transported from one place to another. A moment ago, I was seeing the ceiling of some dark room, and now... I'm looking at the river. Also, my cheek hurts a lot.
...Wait, hold on, let's take stock of the situation here. What happened?
a) I decided to sell Haruhi's demon-possessed headphones.
b) I ran into a beautiful woman who turned out to be a kitsune in disguise.
c) She shot me.
d) I passed out for headphone-related reasons and had a dream I can't remember.
e) I'm now sitting on the ground facing the river, under the shade of a cherry tree.
f) It's nearly sunset, and my head is resting on a comfortable pillow.
Sounds like a normal day by my life's standards.
So, what happened while I was out this time? Who laid me down and put this pillow under me? I doubt it was the kitsune-- wait, this isn't a pillow. I can feel a strong heartbeat reverberating in the back of my skull, and it's far softer than any pillow I've ever slept on. Therefore, this must be a
Kyon: Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhh!
I yell, roll forward, and flip around. Yamada, the kitsune, was sitting there, smiling, like always.
I am strongly reminded of Ryoko Asakura.
Itsuko: You're awake, I see. Please, calm down... I would like to apologize.
And that's when her face finally changes. It becomes... ambivalent.
Itsuko: I'm... ashamed of how I acted earlier. I hope you can forgive me.
My first instinct was to run far away, but it's that expression which halts me. She seems... sincere.
I'll stay and listen, even thought this might just be another trap.
Itsuko: I-I am sorry for many things I have done to you today, but especially for the damage to the side of your face...
Side of my...?
I reach up and touch my right cheek, which had been covered by a bandage... it hurt like hell.
Itsuko: Ah, you shouldn't worry, it's only a graze... it should heal up fine in a couple of days... but please, don't remove the bandage, whatever you do. And, ah, h-how does it feel?
I'm very confused. First the woman tries to seduce me, then she shoots me, and now she just spent the last...
(I check my watch. I've been unconscious for two hours.)
...Two hours treating my wound and then letting me sleep on her? I will never understand this girl.
I might just be falling into her trap again, but at the least, I'd like to know what's been going on.
Kyon: I don't mean to be rude, but I'd like to begin a Question Period of my own... and I'd like some answers.
Yamada stares at me as though to gauge my intentions.
Itsuko: ...I have no right to refuse, but... after I explain everything... would you answer my final question?
Kyon: Deal.
...So... what should I ask first?
I felt like teasing her a little to get back for everything she did today. It's a childish form of revenge, but it's also a satisfying one.
Kyon: Hmm, Question One:
Let's see, something embarrassing...
I hear a very faint noise from what seems like very far away.
Kyon: How many guys have you kissed?
Itsuko: Huh?
Did... did she just blush a little? ...Must have really caught her off guard.
Itsuko: Well, let me see...
Wait, she's answering seriously? T-that was a joke, Yamada-san.
Itsuko: There was the three back then... and the time when I did when he was asleep... and I suppose today counts... so... five?
...Hm. Well, a lot less than I expected, to be honest... hold on, today? What happened today?
Itsuko: Could I, ah, have the next question, please? I don't mean to rush you, of course...
...
Kyon: Sorry... that last one was a joke...
And one in fairly poor taste, come to think of it.
Kyon: I'll seriously start now. Question Two! ...What's your true identity?
Itsuko: ......Eh?
Are you going to act surprised at all my questions!?
Itsuko: No, it's nothing. ...I am who you think I am: Itsuko Koizumi, an esper, your close friend Itsuki's cousin, and a member of the Agency.
...Close friend? Is that what he's telling people?
Kyon: ...I kind of doubt the Agency would order you to hold me up at gunpoint and threaten to shoot me if I didn't comply.
Unfortunately, I think I'm far too important for that. Very unfortunately.
Itsuko: ...I was not under orders. I was acting on my own.
Kyon: So I guess that brings me to my Question Three: What were your intentions back there? Why did you trap me like that in the first place?
I should probably be a lot angrier, but Yamada's face is defusing my indignation... Am I really this weak to pretty girls?
Itsuko: I did say before, but... perhaps it was too stressful a time for you to be paying much attention. No, I will rephrase that, it definitely was. ...My intentions involved these.
She holds up my headphones, which I guess she'd taken off while I was asleep.
Kyon: ...You wanted to steal my headphones?
She shakes her head.
Itsuko: To begin with, they're not your headphones. They belong to a friend of mine. The English inscribed inside it is his, shall we say, signature.
...Huh. I guess I was off completely about it representing kanji characters, then.
Itsuko: ...He's a very important person to me, and to all my friends. He is... missing... right now... and when I saw you in that store, wearing his headphones, and even dressed like him, I... became a bit paranoid... perhaps too much so.
Well, the scar that's going to form on my cheek is a testament to that.
At my words, Yamada stands up and... bows to me. H-hold on, that's a bit...
Itsuko: ...Please forgive me for my foolishness... At least, I hope you can...
...
1)Forgive her.
2)Of course I'll forgive her.
I stand up too.
Kyon: Of course I'll forgive you...
I still don't really understand, but I guess that's enough.
Itsuko: ...Thank you.
And she smiles for the first time.
Itsuko: Is that all the questions, or...
Kyon: Nope, I'm finished.
I think I can be satisfied with this.
Itsuko: Well, then, I think I will--
Kyon: Wait, I still haven't answered your final question.
Itsuko: No, no, it is fine, you may have your secrets.
Kyon: It's only fair this way, right?
Itsuko: ...Hmm, yes, that's true.
...She doesn't need to hear about the hallucinating and comas... she hasn't even asked about why I passed out earlier... she must think it was due to shock or something.
Kyon: The headphones and that music player were delivered to my room with a note saying “Happy Birthday” on it.
Itsuko: ...Was it your birthday that day?
Kyon: No, my birthday is--
A large truck passed by on the nearby road, drowning out my next words. I wish that would stop happening.
Itsuko: How odd...
Kyon: You're telling me.
Yamada holds out the headphones, urging me to take them, but...
Kyon: You keep them. They're important to you, right?
I don't ever want to see them again to be honest.
Itsuko: That's correct, yes. Hmm, I suppose I must give you something in return, then.
She reaches into her pocket and throws me... a shiny silver tube!?
Itsuko: Trade?
Kyon: Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhh!
Yamada holds her ears.
Itsuko: Please don't yell like that, Kyon-kun. You'll scare the passing lovers.
Kyon: What... what...
Itsuko: It's only an ordinary tube of lipstick... there was no gun to begin with. I was only pretending to be a femme fatale. It's a dream I've held since I was little... I'm sorry.
I pick it up off the ground, and gingerly open it. ...Just like she says, a perfectly ordinary tube of lipstick.
...It doesn't look the least bit threatening. I was nearly wetting myself over this?
Kyon: Why are you giving it to me?
Itsuko: A souvenir?
Both of us burst out laughing.
When we recovered, it was about time to separate.
Itsuko: I do have a final request, if you'll listen.
Kyon: Sure... what is it?
Itsuko: I'm tired of fake names. ...Please, call me by my real one.
Kyon: ...Well, I can't call you “Koizumi”, since that's what I call your cousin.
And it'd get pretty confusing if I was talking to both of them at the same time.
Ah, I've got it.
Kyon: How about “Koizumi-san”?
Itsuko: ....................................
Kyon: ...No good?
Itsuko: Ah! Er, no, that's fine. It's perfect. I am “Koizumi-san” from now on. ...Well then, I bid you good day, Kyon-kun.
But just as I turn away...
Itsuko: Oh, it almost escaped my mind... Since we'll be schoolmates from now on, would you like to eat lunch together on Monday?
Kyon: ...Yeah, sure. Why not? I'll see you then.
Although we'll probably have to do it somewhere Haruhi won't be.
Good day to you too, Koizumi-san.
---
I got home far earlier than the rest of my family, so I was able to disguise the fact that I had gone out at all... except for the bandage on my face, which I inconveniently forgot about until right before they walked in the door.
I made up some lame excuse about falling down the stairs, but my mother's worrywart mode was still activated.
As a result, dinner was a nightmare. It consisted of my mother telling me over and over that I need to be more careful, while my sister casually mentioned that she hoped my wound would turn into a big scar, since it'd “look cool”.
I managed to get away by saying that I had homework to do (which is true), but both a horrible realization and a horrible feeling were waiting for me at the door to my room.
The horrible realization was this: If Koizumi-san's lipstick gun was just a tube of lipstick she pretened was a gun... [i]why do I have a bullet wound on my face?
The horrible feeling was this: Dread. Dread that something even more horrible would be waiting for me when I opened the door in front of me.
I was depressingly correct.
Those headphones were sitting neatly on my pillow, the xPod sitting just as neatly next to them, alongside a note, written in curving, girly characters.
“Kyon-kun,
Sorry for breaking into your house, but I figured you'd be better off holding onto these. After all, you need to have your sweet dreams every night, right?
Right?
Itsuko <3”
Ohohohohohohohoho.
I'll get around to answering the backlog of posts I need to respond to tomorrow. For now, please enjoy the scene.
Ok, I am not sure what to say. Well, first I would say I believe Kyon would be more alert after, you know, being shot. It is not exactly OOC, tough, but I believe he would know better then accept a invitation to lunch (specially knowing he would be in a desert place, so no one would see and tell Haruhi. I guess he could always bring Yuki along. No one would be stupid enough to threatening he with she nearby.
About the shot itself. While is true it is actually hard to reconize (I wouldn't, despite having heared already), it is still a pretty suspicious sound to hear in a calm park. It is weekend, so I believe there is a lot of couples there. Also, Haruhi was nearby, it was why Kyon came so close of her after all, wouldn't she hear it?
The most important part is the wound itself. Bellets hurt A lot. It isn't that simple to treat, even being low caliber. Futhermore, it was on his face. The cheek is very thin, even a smal gun would make a big wound there. And probably a permanent scar. Anyway, it would probably be treated in a hospital. If he needs a wound, I would suggest the ear. The the wound would be permanent as well, but it is less severe, I believe. Another solution would be hitting the jaw. I don't really know how a bullet work, but as long there is a bone the damage should be smaller, I guess. Anyway, the problem with the cheek is it would probably tear it, with is a big problem. Even hitting in another place, it is extremally luck it was a light wound, and this should be commented eventually. (I understand he not realizing it imediatelly, tough)
Now, for Itsuko's kisses. Well, desconsidering Haruki and Kyon, 3 is a pretty big number for a japanese high school girl isn't it? But, well, I guess that since one of then is plot related it is not a big really a big deal (it got easier after the first kiss, after all). But would Kyon really comment it is a small number?
Anyway, the ending was very interesting. I believe it wasn't really Itsuko who send it righ? So, for all she knows, Kyon have just stole it, again. I wonder how she will react. :heh: Specially a problem, since Kyon might wear it thinking he is impressing her.
Now, I don't believe no one commented yet. But why exactly she have forgive him. Does she remember the dream? Do all girl remember it, for that matter? And, again, how will she react? Will she notice there is a very strange power behind it? Or she will think it is a even weirder conspiration? So many questions! Danm, who cares for Kyonko? Who cares for any other girl? I want more Itsuko now!
What is behind this headphones, by the way? We haven't discussed that yet right? Is it Haruhi/ki? Why? What in their unconcious would make that to happen? It is beyond "bringing sliders to have fun with us". It might as well kill Kyon. Or is the oposite? I would understand if it is a manifestation of Haruhi desire wanting Kyon to have super powers (hey, this is nice theory :heh:), but it is tied to Haruki. Why Haruki has any connection with Kyon, but not Kyonko?
Also, I did update the KOIZUMI Memories and 'Supermodel', if anyone's interested.
It is hard to find the changes, you should bold it, like the editors. :heh: Actually, I really hope you do so. It don't make difference for me now, but if you change earlier scenes, that are already in the code highlighting the changes is important.
I find the changes in the Memories, tough. Rereading it I noticed something, there is a lot less random sex change there. I believe you added a new scene there that all cast is genderbended, for exemple (oposed for being a mix of genderbended and normal cast). It was on purpose or was it a mistake?
It's actually sort of a play on words. "Dolus" is literally "fraud", but the word can also mean "trap". A honey trap, in this case.
Hmm, are you sure? I looked in a few on-line dictionaries myself, and, while trap is, indeed one of the meanings, 'laqueus' seens to be more correct. I guess 'dolus' is trap in the same way you could say a fraud is a kind of trap? It is not like I know latin, tough. So I might be completelly wrong. Btw, this (http://www.translation-guide.com/free_online_translators.php?from=English&to=Latin) on-line transtalor translate 'honey trap' as 'mellis laqueus'. I believe it has a good sound, don't you think?
Heatth, you're a badass. Thanks for all the hard work.
You are welcome. :) It is easier then it seens, tough. I just have to search for "September the xth" posted by Kaisos. :heh: The hardest was finding the edits (not all fallow the same pattern). Also the images, but bhl did it for me. (thanks buddy).
Kyon's overdescription emphasizes how hot he is for her. It stays.
If you say. Anyway, you missed a important part of my comment. I really believe not even Itsuko would begin a conversation with random theories. :heh: I beleive she would greet him first (and then surprising him with The Anthropic Principle)
As soon as he's in a real relationship with them, yeah. Although he starts calling Kyonko "Nayuki" right off the bat...
No, I mean, even if Itsuko asked, I don't think he would call her first name (even if it is a fake one). There would be no reason for he don't calling Mikuru be hers, for exemple. Of course he would start caling each girl by their given name in the course of the route.
First death is on Day 6. And as for a Dojo-of-sorts, I'm currently considering Disappearance Itsuki and Haruhi. In fact, that's what I'll probably go with.
Oh, well, this idea is not bad. I prefer one old one (you know which), but I understand the lack of practicality. However, I believe the CCPs would be a better idea (I beleive he was one of the options right?). First the are hilarious. Second we are having a sprite set for then anyway right? So, why don't just use it? It save binjovi's time and give screentime for who deserve it. Heck, the Taniguchis and Kunikidas might be there as well, why not? They could alternate or something. Like a space for the underused characters. (hey, I belive one of reasons of Tiger Dojo was giving something to Taiga)
Sure you can. That's the Suzumiya way!
No you can't! :heh: Well, it is not like it would stop him anyway. :p
Resurrectio would be a masculine ending, but that's not the real issue here. The real issue is that the word for 'resurrection' in actual Latin instead of Latinese would be Resurgum.
So you'd want Bellum Resurgum.
Resurrectio is also resurrection, tough. I don't know if the usage is correct, however. Bello Resurrectio sound more spanish for me, anyway.
I was after another word entirely, not "resurrection". "Resurrectio" just happens to mean "awakening", but looks like a certain English word... completely intentional, I assure you. Of course, I don't know how the language works, but...
Thank you both anyway.
Err, it don't 'just happen' to look like resurrection. It also means resurrection. Actually, I believe it is the most common meaning, as all the 4 major latin languages plus english use it that way.
Demon-possessed headphones? I really should go back and read the rest of the VN days so far. It's pretty confusing starting in the middle.:heh:
Yes, you should. :) Click in the link on my sig for the archive.
Kaisos Erranon
2010-01-16, 17:49
Ok, I am not sure what to say. Well, first I would say I believe Kyon would be more alert after, you know, being shot. It is not exactly OOC, tough, but I believe he would know better then accept a invitation to lunch (specially knowing he would be in a desert place, so no one would see and tell Haruhi. I guess he could always bring Yuki along. No one would be stupid enough to threatening he with she nearby.
I did try to justify this. Kyon is rather a sucker for beautiful women, and to be honest, Itsuko IS sorry.
Kyon is pretty good at reading (most) people. He's also an idiot.
About the shot itself. While is true it is actually hard to reconize (I wouldn't, despite having heared already), it is still a pretty suspicious sound to hear in a calm park. It is weekend, so I believe there is a lot of couples there. Also, Haruhi was nearby, it was why Kyon came so close of her after all, wouldn't she hear it?
As I mentioned before, actual gunshots sound like fireworks. It's more of a "pop" rather than a "BANG".
And yes, I'm sure that Haruhi did hear it... Itsuko, thinking fast, would have had to drag Kyon further away.
The most important part is the wound itself. Bellets hurt A lot. It isn't that simple to treat, even being low caliber. Futhermore, it was on his face. The cheek is very thin, even a smal gun would make a big wound there. And probably a permanent scar. Anyway, it would probably be treated in a hospital. If he needs a wound, I would suggest the ear. The the wound would be permanent as well, but it is less severe, I believe. Another solution would be hitting the jaw. I don't really know how a bullet work, but as long there is a bone the damage should be smaller, I guess. Anyway, the problem with the cheek is it would probably tear it, with is a big problem. Even hitting in another place, it is extremally luck it was a light wound, and this should be commented eventually. (I understand he not realizing it imediatelly, tough)
The Agency has access to medical technology that it probably shouldn't, whether due to liasons with the Time Travelers or reverse-engineering Interface techology.
The bandage on Kyon's face exudes a substance containing millions of nanomachines, which work to repair wounds on a cellular level. By next morning, he won't even have a scar.
Now, for Itsuko's kisses. Well, desconsidering Haruki and Kyon, 3 is a pretty big number for a japanese high school girl isn't it? But, well, I guess that since one of then is plot related it is not a big really a big deal (it got easier after the first kiss, after all). But would Kyon really comment it is a small number?
You're assuming Japanese high school girls are as pure as anime/manga would have you believe. Itsuko certainly isn't, at any rate. Not that Kyon cares.
Why Haruki has any connection with Kyon, but not Kyonko?
This is all I'll answer here, but... I might mention that Haruki and Kyon look very similar.
Hmm, are you sure? I looked in a few on-line dictionaries myself, and, while trap is, indeed one of the meanings, 'laqueus' seens to be more correct. I guess 'dolus' is trap in the same way you could say a fraud is a kind of trap? It is not like I know latin, tough. So I might be completelly wrong. Btw, this (http://www.translation-guide.com/free_online_translators.php?from=English&to=Latin) on-line transtalor translate 'honey trap' as 'mellis laqueus'. I believe it has a good sound, don't you think?
'Laqueus' is trap as in 'snare'. 'Dolus' is trap as in 'fraud' or 'trick', which is exactly what a honey trap (http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=honey%20trap) is.
Oh, well, this idea is not bad. I prefer one old one (you know which), but I understand the lack of practicality. However, I believe the CCPs would be a better idea (I beleive he was one of the options right?). First the are hilarious. Second we are having a sprite set for then anyway right? So, why don't just use it? It save binjovi's time and give screentime for who deserve it. Heck, the Taniguchis and Kunikidas might be there as well, why not? They could alternate or something. Like a space for the underused characters. (hey, I belive one of reasons of Tiger Dojo was giving something to Taiga)
Because Disappearance Itsuki and Haruhi are completely different from the usual Itsuki and Haruhi, and I want to have a more traditional tsundere (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=H9C0xA4FpEk) at any rate.
Not that loli-CCP doesn't cover that, but she doesn't have anyone to be tsundere off of.
Magnificate
2010-01-16, 17:59
The Agency has access to medical technology that it probably shouldn't, whether due to liasons with the Time Travelers or reverse-engineering Interface techology.
The bandage on Kyon's face exudes a substance containing millions of nanomachines, which work to repair wounds on a cellular level. By next morning, he won't even have a scar.
I sincerely think that it would be better to refrain from using that sort of explanation in favor of ear wound. Or Itsuko clawing at Kyon's face with her fingernails. ;)
Kaisos Erranon
2010-01-16, 18:03
I sincerely think that it would be better to refrain from using that sort of explanation in favor of ear wound.
Why? This is a science fiction story. Such things are perfectly viable.
Could always just say that the bullet itself didn't hit Kyon, but the recoil from the gun bruised his face, if you didn't want science fiction.
Magnificate
2010-01-16, 18:10
Why? This is a science fiction story. Such things are perfectly viable.
Personal preference for not resorting to science fiction when a mundane explanation is available. In addition, correct if I am wrong, I was under the impression that all three groups observing Haruhi have little to no contact with each other aside from the SOS Brigage. There are also problems with access to future technology. It's either *classified information* or so far beyond the understanding of modern humans that it seems like magic. In my opinion Agency works better when limited to esper powers in Closed Spaces, loads of money and connections.
Kaisos Erranon
2010-01-16, 18:11
Could always just say that the bullet itself didn't hit Kyon, but the recoil from the gun bruised his face, if you didn't want science fiction.
-_-
This is a science fiction story. We have aliens and time travelers and espers. Why is it so hard to get you guys to accept ANYTHING?
Personal preference for not resorting to science fiction when a mundane explanation is available. In addition, correct if I am wrong, I was under the impression that all three groups observing Haruhi have little to no contact with each other aside from the SOS Brigage. There are also problems with access to future technology. It's either *classified information* or so far beyond the understanding of modern humans that it seems like magic. In my opinion Agency works better when limited to esper powers in Closed Spaces, loads of money and connections.
Of course they have contact with one another, just not much. There is a lot more going on behind the scenes than Kyon is aware of... this is suggested several times.
If you want an alternative explanation, she could have got the bandage from, say, Yuuki. It doesn't matter. It serves a purpose, I just haven't gotten to that scene yet.
But you probably won't want to read it anyway if it offends your sensibilities.
I did try to justify this. Kyon is rather a sucker for beautiful women, and to be honest, Itsuko IS sorry.
Kyon is pretty good at reading (most) people. He's also an idiot.
I guess. :heh: Still, I wonder if he will at last cal Yuki for backup or something. Tough I guess the headphones could make he be bold enough to
carellesly try to get alone with the hot girl who tryed to kill him. :p
As I mentioned before, actual gunshots sound like fireworks. It's more of a "pop" rather than a "BANG".
And yes, I'm sure that Haruhi did hear it... Itsuko, thinking fast, would have had to drag Kyon further away.
Man, this need a lot of explanation. Itsuko had to drag and hide a man who, as far as she knows (shot in the face) is severelly wounded. At last make Haruhi commenting in the next day how suspicious that sound was. :heh:
(a firework sound is a 'pop'?)
The Agency has access to medical technology that it probably shouldn't, whether due to liasons with the Time Travelers or reverse-engineering Interface techology.
The bandage on Kyon's face exudes a substance containing millions of nanomachines, which work to repair wounds on a cellular level. By next morning, he won't even have a scar.
I always have the impression the Time Travelers like to relate thenself as less as possible with the 'present'. Your Mitsuuru(Big) also gave me that impression.
Anyway, I guess any half assed explanation is good. Just make sure to present it eventually. A wound in the face is realy serious. Also, even being a good medicine, it should leave a scar.
You're assuming Japanese high school girls are as pure as anime/manga would have you believe. Itsuko certainly isn't, at any rate. Not that Kyon cares.
You got me wrong. I was 'complaning' more about Kyon's comment then about the number. As I said, the number is understandable. But I doubt Kyon would expect a much bigger number. She don't looks a slut that much. :p
'Laqueus' is trap as in 'snare'. 'Dolus' is trap as in 'fraud' or 'trick', which is exactly what a honey trap (http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=honey%20trap) is.
Make sense. :p I didn't know the term.
Because Disappearance Itsuki and Haruhi are completely different from the usual Itsuki and Haruhi, and I want to have a more traditional tsundere (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=H9C0xA4FpEk) at any rate.
Not that loli-CCP doesn't cover that, but she doesn't have anyone to be tsundere off of.
They are not that different. Itsuki is. But not Haruhi. After hearing Kyon's explanation she acted just like regular Haruhi. And, before that, she was how regular Haruhi was before meeting Kyon, anyway.
Anyway, how a male tsundere can be more traditional? :p
I still say the space for underused character is awesome. I don't really like Disappearance Itsuki, anyway.
PP:
For the Scy-Fi thing. I agree with Magnificate (so glad something thiks like me!). It is Scy-fi, but not that much.
PPP:
Btw, I agree not everything need to be explained, even if I ask about everything. However, I believe everything needs a explanation. The gund wound explanation must be in story, tough. It is to serius to be ignored.
Kaisos Erranon
2010-01-16, 18:30
Personal preference for not resorting to science fiction when a mundane explanation is available. In addition, correct if I am wrong, I was under the impression that all three groups observing Haruhi have little to no contact with each other aside from the SOS Brigage. There are also problems with access to future technology. It's either *classified information* or so far beyond the understanding of modern humans that it seems like magic. In my opinion Agency works better when limited to esper powers in Closed Spaces, loads of money and connections.
Urgh, I'm sorry for exploding above.
Rest assured that yes, I will justify this later, and also that my interpretation of the Agency is VERY (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2291525&postcount=14141) different (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2413561&postcount=15984) from the usual.
dragon4dudes
2010-01-16, 18:32
Abnormal/Paranormal/Subnormal interpretations make this fun. And it's rather surprising what the US Government has.... Not that I would know.
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-16, 18:36
And it's rather surprising what the US Government has.... Not that I would know.
Magic bullets. That's right, magic exists. They've just been hiding it.
Magnificate
2010-01-16, 18:39
Urgh, I'm sorry for exploding above.
Rest assured that yes, I will justify this later, and also that my interpretation of the Agency is VERY (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2291525&postcount=14141) different (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2413561&postcount=15984) from the usual.
No worries. It probably didn't help that I am not a native English speaker and my comment might have been untintentionally worded as implying criticism.
Considering the story so far I can safely predict the explanation scene will be all kinds of awesome. ;)
Kaisos Erranon
2010-01-16, 18:40
Magic bullets. That's right, magic exists. They've just been hiding it.
Well, sufficiently advanced technology IS indistinguishable from magic...
Considering the story so far I can safely predict the explanation scene will be all kinds of awesome. ;)
Hmm, probably.
It's all good anyway.
I'll have the first Kyonko scene up in approximately ten hours.
edkedkedk
2010-01-16, 18:49
-_-
This is a science fiction story. We have aliens and time travelers and espers. Why is it so hard to get you guys to accept ANYTHING?
This made me laugh because it's so true :heh:
Personally I'm fine with the 'healing using data manipulation technology' route. We have seen Yuki reconstructing an entire classroom, and Ryoko manipulating data from one physical form to another. Itsuki has said that 'the Organization has tried to make contacts with other sources of connection, so I do hold a certain amount of intelligence'. Furthermore, I'm sure ESPers have suffered injuries in the course of fighting the Celestials. It's hard to believe that they are invincible and escape unscathed every single time from combat in closed space (those Celestials do look tough).
In this case, isn't it probable that the Organization has some kind of healing technology for the injured ESPers? The ESPers have civilian identities to return to, and putting them in public hospitals would raise a lot of questions, while putting them to heal in their private facilities will make them disappear from their duties for some time. I don't care how powerful you are, if you're a flying red ball and get whacked by a blue glowing giant, you're going down. Hard.
Yuki didn't leave a scar on her body when she got impaled by Ryoko (at least I don't think she did :heh: We might never know). Kyon, being such an important person of observation for all factions, will get top-notch treatment if he does get injured (severely in this case, if the medical explanations so far are right), especially to cover up the fact that Itsuko messed up majorly on her own accord.
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-16, 18:58
Yuki didn't leave a scar on her body when she got impaled by Ryoko (at least I don't think she did :heh: We might never know).
Don't really need to assume one way or the other. Sigh gives plenty of evidence that Interfaces can regenerate.
No worries. It probably didn't help that I am not a native English speaker and my comment might have been untintentionally worded as implying criticism.
Considering the story so far I can safely predict the explanation scene will be all kinds of awesome. ;)
Worry not. It was mostly my fault for pushing Kaisos to far this time. :heh:
Well, since I seen to have really pissed of you, Kaisos, I believe I should apologise:
I am trully sorry. I am realy sorry for annoying you too much. However, I don't do that just to beingannoying, you know (well, I hope you know).
I have many times seen storiews(fan fiction) falling due to over 'pleased' fanbase, who never complains and keep saying how awesome the stories (even when it is not anyome). However, moost of the goods stories tha keep being good have some critics. Sometimes some very agressive critics. I believe doing what I do I help you to see your scenes for a new angle. You might think in a way you haven't tought before and might improve it. Even if you don't agree, seeing by a new angle strengthen your view.
However, I do realise I sometimes go too far. I frequently sound too arrogant. I also keep longing a fight to the last stand, even when it is useless.
For that, I am sorry.
I also understand I 'complain' sometimes too early. How can I know if don't have an explanation if it is not finished yet? However, if I don't bring the matter now, when will I? Somethings, like 'how many guys Itsuko kissec" or "how she hid Kyon from Haruhi" is botherline meaningless. If I comment latter it will feel strange, why bring on something such old unimportant thing? Even things that are important, like Kyon's wound. It wouldn't be strange I bring it on 'latter', but when 'latter' is?It is the next scene? Or the one after that? Maybe the next Day? I believe you, Kaisos, wouldn't miss a very important detail. But what if he does? Is what important for me important to you? It would be if I explain myself? That is why I need comment, "complain", as soon as possible.
I also try to see the intension of you, writer, behind everything. But I am frankly not good with that. I miss things, that is why I ask for explanation. I believe I can see the betweenlines sometimes, tough. I tought mentioning why the hell would Itsuko have a hi-tech bandage with her, even in another world (where she can't count with 'her' Organization). However, adding it to the Kiss of Death, I believe you are trying to tell he is always full of 'secret agent devices'. Despite being 'only' a school girl and have as mission 'only' observe a girl, this bandage tell me she believe she migh be hurt, seriously hurt, at any time. Rival agents atack maybe? Or just for healing from the fight with the Shinjis (never know when they are appearing, after all)?
I want to say, as last thing, I really like your writing. If not I wouldn't keep reading it until now. Even having complaning that much, Itsuko's scenes were of my favourites. I don't like the scy-fi focus you are doing on the Organization, however, I love the 'secret agent' thing you are doing with Itsuko. Please, don't mistakenly believe I am telling you are a bad writer. You are not. Not eeverything needs to have be explained, even if they need to have one. I keep 'complaning' to pull the max of your writing. Because I am really loving this.
That is it. Sorry be the annoyance. I will try to be better, even if I continue with my 'complains'. I hope you can understand me better now. I also hope I am not mistake believing I am somehow helping you (even if just a little) with my comments. Please tell me if I am.
Well, sufficiently advanced technology IS indistinguishable from magic...
I would argue why they have sufficiently advanced technology, tough. How would they get it? I doubt it is from the Time Travelers, as they don't seen to like each other. As a wide guess, I would say it is something related to what was buried in Tsuruya's mountain. She is related to the Organization, after all.
Personally I'm fine with the 'healing using data manipulation technology' route. We have seen Yuki reconstructing an entire classroom, and Ryoko manipulating data from one physical form to another. Itsuki has said that 'the Organization has tried to make contacts with other sources of connection, so I do hold a certain amount of intelligence'. Furthermore, I'm sure ESPers have suffered injuries in the course of fighting the Celestials. It's hard to believe that they are invincible and escape unscathed every single time from combat in closed space (those Celestials do look tough).
Eh, exept the Organization shouldn't be able to do the same thing as Yuki-tachi.
In this case, isn't it probable that the Organization has some kind of healing technology for the injured ESPers? The ESPers have civilian identities to return to, and putting them in public hospitals would raise a lot of questions, while putting them to heal in their private facilities will make them disappear from their duties for some time. I don't care how powerful you are, if you're a flying red ball and get whacked by a blue glowing giant, you're going down. Hard.
I agree here, tough. While I don't think such healing device would be related by any means to the interfaces 'magic', what you say is true. I don't really like too much scy-fi but don't see much problem with it.
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-16, 20:08
I would argue why they have sufficiently advanced technology, tough.
That wasn't related to the Organization. Not unless they're connected to the US Government, that is. :heh:
dragon4dudes
2010-01-16, 20:21
If we assume the Organization is an undercover international organization, then the assumption that they are connected the US Government is very logical. That would also mean they could have access to every nation's top secret information.
Nanao-kun
2010-01-16, 21:15
If we assume the Organization is an undercover international organization, then the assumption that they are connected the US Government is very logical. That would also mean they could have access to every nation's top secret information.
And suddenly the Organization is now on the scale of an international mafia. In fact, it may even have hands in the mafia.
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-16, 21:23
And now this topic has started again. Awesome. :heh:
*e* Since we're on the subject anyway... the Tsuruya family is pretty rich, no? And they're one of the "sponsors" of the Organization... now, if the Tsuruya family were, say, yakuza...
Iaevuous
2010-01-16, 21:26
And suddenly the Organization is now on the scale of an international mafia. In fact, it may even have hands in the mafia.
Perhaps it's NERV?
swtrooper42
2010-01-16, 22:37
Perhaps it's NERV?
Or maybe the Organization BECOMES Nerv.
The town is actually the future location of Tokyo 3. Tsuruya's mountain is actually an entrance to the geofront. Human interfaces are actually half-angel. Evangelions are actually Celestials that the Organization somehow turn into Evangelions by infusing them with the souls of Espers.
IT ALL MAKES SENSE.
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-16, 22:57
I'm sure there's a better place to discuss that theory. We've already been warned about this sort of thing twice, so I don't think we'll get off with another warning. :heh:
swtrooper42
2010-01-16, 23:13
Ok, here's a topic.
How are Disappearance Itsuki and Haruhi different from their normal counterparts?
Disappearance Itsuki seems the same to me other than the fact of not knowing Kyon. Haruhi seemed to change back to normal after Kyon's big reveal. So how are they different?
Been doing some more sketching. This time, for the dream sequence prologue. These are still pretty rudimentary, so take that as a warning.
http://dl.dropbox.com/u/1074190/Kyon%20and%20Yuki%20Dream%20Sequence.png
This one is, perhaps, a little hard to read right now. It's basically a closeup shot of Yuki's eye and glasses. Kyon, who is sitting on the other side of the table, is reflected in them.
http://dl.dropbox.com/u/1074190/Kyon%20and%20Itsuki%20Dream%20Sequence%202.png
Itsuki picks up "Kyon's King" in a game of chess.
http://dl.dropbox.com/u/1074190/Kyon%20and%20Cricket%20Dream%20Sequence.png
"Have you ever seen a cave cricket? Well, if not, I'd like to show you what I'm looking at right now."
Ok, here's a topic.
How are Disappearance Itsuki and Haruhi different from their normal counterparts?
Disappearance Itsuki seems the same to me other than the fact of not knowing Kyon. Haruhi seemed to change back to normal after Kyon's big reveal. So how are they different?
I suppose, technically, that's still off topic as this is the genderbending thread, but Haruhi's basically the same in Disappearance. Itsuki, however, seems a bit more lighthearted, as he isn't required to keep so many secrets and whatnot. That's my guess anyway.
besieger
2010-01-16, 23:19
Very nice, Binjovi. I suppose this is a rough sketch, but the number of legs on the crickets don't match. =P
Very nice, Binjovi. I suppose this is a rough sketch, but the number of legs on the crickets don't match. =P
They're there somewhere. These are mostly just to get some ideas out of my head and see where I can take them from here. Much more refining is obviously necessary. Thanks, though.
grylsyjaeger
2010-01-17, 00:05
Nice sketches indeed, Binjovi.
swtrooper42
2010-01-17, 00:12
I suppose, technically, that's still off topic as this is the genderbending thread, but Haruhi's basically the same in Disappearance. Itsuki, however, seems a bit more lighthearted, as he isn't required to keep so many secrets and whatnot. That's my guess anyway.
I was just inquiring because Kaisos brought them up as potential hosts for the Tiger Dojo thing. I was wondering how they would be fundamentally different so I could imagine such a scene.
Looking at your sketches makes me wish a had even a little art talent in me. Those look really good.
I like the first one a lot, Binjovi. But then, I like Yuki, so that's probably not terribly surprising.
Ho hum... I guess now that the archive is being updated again, I should start looking at more editing and such. Not sure how my schedule this semester is going to work out (since I need to find a job to continue feeding myself) but I'll try to keep up with things as best as possible.
@Binjovi: nice sketches indeed. I like how Itsuki literally picks up Kyon in the second. Are these gonna be colored?
@scify: Good luck. everyone's rooting for you :)
Ok, here's a topic.
How are Disappearance Itsuki and Haruhi different from their normal counterparts?
Disappearance Itsuki seems the same to me other than the fact of not knowing Kyon. Haruhi seemed to change back to normal after Kyon's big reveal. So how are they different?
This is a very interesting question. It seemed pretty normal for a guy like Itsuki to keep pursuing Haruhi even after her interest in him began to wan. For a newly transferred girl student to keep after a guy instead, especially one of questionable past like Haruki; Itsuko would no doubt be subject to the usual shoujo manga angst. I sorta want to read that shoujo manga, much like how I keep reading Nagato Yuki-chan. :heh:
PS: Regarding the gunshot, I just figured the bullet didn't hit Kyon, but the muzzle blast gave him some burns and tore some skin.
Kaisos Erranon
2010-01-17, 07:46
I couldn't quite finish all of it in time... it's missing one alternate scene, but here's what I have for now.
Bad Third Impression
Why don’t I go to the library? There’ve been a couple books I’ve been interested in reading for a while now, anyway.
Maybe I can discuss literature with Nagato… or not.
[Scene: Kitchen]
My mother and sister aren’t around, so I leave a note on the fridge. My mother also left a note on the fridge, telling me that she left sandwiches inside it.
This must be a reward for my hard work this morning. Hooray for me.
[Scene: Library]
It appears to have been a very long time since I was in the library... since its caretakers, like those of certain bookstores, appears to be in the habit of moving everything around once every few months for whatever reason.
As a result, I spent some time wandering around the place, trying to find the sci-fi section, when...
THUMP!
????: Why...
I ran into someone, who fell over as a result of the impact.
Someone familiar. It's Girl A. She's making a very terrifying expression while rubbing the back of her head.
Girl A: Youuuuuuu.
She's also still in her school uniform... Funny, I never thought I'd meet anyone but Nagato who wears it on weekends.
...That face is really making me want to run away.
Girl A: Do you have it out for me or something!?
Kyon: ...Not particularly, no.
Actually, Girl A, if you look at it from my perspective, it's more the opposite... you're the one who keeps taking my shoes and running into me.
Girl A: Sigh... whatever. Help me up.
...
Well, it's not out of my way or anything.
I grab her outstretched hand and haul her to her feet.
I don't get even half a 'thank-you' in return.
Kyon: ...Your hands are pretty hard, for a girl.
Girl A: Shut up. I do a lot of heavily lifting, entirely against my will.
I know how you feel, actually. I feel like I've lost weight since I've known Haruhi, although that might be due to stress rather than exercise.
Kyon: So, what brings you to the library?
Girl A: Why do you think? A library is a repository for books. People come here to read and to borrow said books. Now, given this information, it should be very easy to figure out why I'm here. Only an idiot would ever question why someone is in the library... but you're not that kind of person, right?
That snarky little...
Kyon: Well, then how is the borrowing and reading of books coming along?
I try to be civil, and she just...
Girl A: Terrible. They won't accept my library card here.
Kyon: Really? That's too bad.
Though I don't think that at all. If this person wants to borrow books, it can only be for a nefarious reason.
Girl A: So yeah, can I, um, borrow your library card? Please?
Kyon: ...
I'm reminded of the last time I came here, with Nagato... I got her a library card back then, too. Although Girl A here is demanding the use of my card rather than the one of her own, and the general situation and atmosphere are completely different from Nagato's usual... it's almost as if I took a smaller Haruhi along instead.
Kyon: You're pretty short, huh?
Girl A: ...I'm going to pretend you didn't say that, but only because I want something from you right now.
To be honest, I feel a horrible sense of foreboding if I let this girl use my library card. It's almost like the feeling that I'll never see it again, just like with what nearly happened with my indoor shoes.
Kyon: So have you found treatment for your kleptomania yet?
Girl A: Shut up with the jokes and just give the the damned card!
...
[DECISION POINT HERE]
1)Give her the damned card.
2)Leave.
Return of the Thief
Why don’t I go to the library? There’ve been a couple books I’ve been interested in reading for a while now, anyway.
Maybe I can discuss literature with Nagato… or not.
[Scene: Kitchen]
My mother and sister aren’t around, so I leave a note on the fridge. My mother also left a note on the fridge, telling me that she left sandwiches inside it.
This must be a reward for my hard work this morning. Hooray for me.
[Scene: Library]
It appears to have been a very long time since I was in the library... since its caretakers, like those of certain bookstores, appears to be in the habit of moving everything around once every few months for whatever reason.
As a result, I spent some time wandering around the place, trying to find the sci-fi section, when...
THUMP!
????: Why...
I ran into someone, who fell over as a result of the impact.
Someone familiar. It's Girl A. Her hands are now occupied with rubbing the back of her head while trying to pull down the hem of her skirt.
Kyon: Yo.
Girl A: Why do we keep meeting like this!? What did I do...
Kyon: Don't ask me.
I feel kinda sorry for her, so I help her up.
Girl A: Mmm, thanks. Though you could at least watch where you're going in future.
What about you!?
Girl A is still wearing the school uniform I saw her in yesterday... and it looks like it's been slept in again. Despite her best efforts to brush herself off, I can also see some dirt and grass...
...
Kyon: Just wondering... do you actually have a place to sleep? Because--
Girl A: One question.
Kyon: What?
Girl A: That's what we agreed on payment yesterday, remember? You help me with something, and I answer a question about something that's none of your business.
...I can see where this is going.
Kyon: What do you want now?
Girl A: Well, um, if it's not too much trouble... I need to borrow your library card.
...
Warning bells are going off in my head. This is the girl who nearly stole my indoor shoes and that I helped to steal an expensive monitor. If I loan her my library card, I'll probably never see it again.
Kyon: I have a better idea. If you don't have a library card, I can just get one made for you.
I'm reminded of the last time I came here, with Nagato... I got her a library card back then, too. Although Girl A is of a completely different character.
Girl A: ...That'd be giving in...
Kyon: Huh?
Girl A: Nothing. Just accept the fact that I'm not gonna bother to get my own card and just lemme use yours.
Kyon: How about no?
I'm not risking my precious library card just so you can steal books and blame it all on me, and certainly not for an answer to a question that I asked on a whim. Frankly, I don't really care where you and your thieving friends sleep, so long as it's not in my backyard.
Girl A rolls her eyes and starts muttering to herself.
Girl A: Damn it, and I can't offer money since I'm broke... I was hoping I wasn't going to have to use this technique again... should work, though...
Girl A adopts a kind of quasi-cute stance, he hands crossed over her skirt, knees bent slightly inward, and slouching forward. She looks up at me with what she probably thinks is an adorable expression. (She's right, but...)
Girl A: Could you please loan me your library card? I'd be ever so grateful to you, big brother...
Her voice oozes with honey.
Kyon: ...Guh.
Fortunately, I'm not gullible or weak enough to be tricked by an act as stupid as this. Women aren't my weak point, at least.
Kyon: ...The answer is still no. And that's not even half convincing.
She drops the facade immediately.
Girl A: Damn it, Itsuko! That's the last time I listen to you, ever! Fine, I'll have to do this my own way.
She... reaches up and puts her hands on my shoulders... and gets, uh, uncomfortably close.
Girl A: I-I-I'll g-give you a k-kiss if you-you'll just give me the c-c-c-card...
Her face, although bright red, displays an upset expression at being forced into this. It's pretty clear that once I give her the card, she'll just run away without even delivering. I shouldn't even consider this. Maybe I would if it was Asahina-san, but...
Girl A fails completely at seducing people... I'm not sure whether that's a positive thing or not.
I gently push her away.
Kyon: Look. I don't think that's a very--
Even more red.
Girl A: Ah, fine, whatever! Don't accept my g-generous offer! Just give me the damned card!
She's being so unreasonable...
...
[DECISION POINT HERE]
1)Give her the damned card.
2)Leave.
Damned Card
Sure, Girl A, take my damned card. It's not as though I was going to use it today anyway.
Oh, wait. Yes I was.
Girl A: Eh? Really! Ah, thanks, thanks.
She snatches the card out of my hand. How courteous of her.
Girl A: I'll be a few.
Kyon: Yeah, sure.
I've grabbed a manga off of a nearby shelf and am just about to sit down in a comfortable armchair to read when Girl A returns, laden with five massive world history texts.
Kyon: Wonderful timing.
Girl A: I wanted to grab more, but they told me I could only take out five at a time...
Kyon: Dare I ask why you need these massive things so badly?
Girl A: ...Research.
Kyon: What kind of research?
Girl A: History research, moron. What else would I need history books for?
Touche.
Kyon: And let me guess: Your next request for me is to carry these wherever for you, right?
Girl A: ...
That disgruntled look tells me that I'm correct.
Kyon: ...You know, you really don't have the right to treat me like a slave. I'm not your boyfriend or anything. Hell, we're not even friends
---
If Thief = True THEN
Despite you offering to kiss me earlier.
---
Girl A: ...I'm treating you like a slave?
Kyon: .........
Girl A: Okay, fair enough... why don't I carry half the books and you carry the other half? We're only going down to the station... and it's not like you have anything to do on Saturdays anyway, right?
Bored Flagless
Kyon: Goodness, it's late. I had better get going.
Girl A: H-hey! Get back here and help me, you asshole!
Ssssh. You're supposed to be quiet in a library.
Well, I guess I'll just head home... it's not like I have anything else to do.
Girl A: I hope you burn in the fires of Tartarus!
I'll update this post tomorrow.
As for now, I'm very tired.
This is a very interesting question. It seemed pretty normal for a guy like Itsuki to keep pursuing Haruhi even after her interest in him began to wan. For a newly transferred girl student to keep after a guy instead, especially one of questionable past like Haruki; Itsuko would no doubt be subject to the usual shoujo manga angst. I sorta want to read that shoujo manga, much like how I keep reading Nagato Yuki-chan. :heh:
Heh, that is true. I also would like to read it. I wish Yuki-chan was faster, 19 pages in a monthly manga is to few.
Anyway, while Disappearance!Itsuki is different from Regular!Itsuki, Disappearance!Haruhi is not. I don't realy like then runing the dojo. I would have to wait to see, but I feel it would be just Haruhi talking about things while meekly agree. I don't really understand the 'tsundere' part Kaisos talked about.
PS: Regarding the gunshot, I just figured the bullet didn't hit Kyon, but the muzzle blast gave him some burns and tore some skin.
This... actually make sense. I am not sure, but these burn are still pretty severe right? Even so, being treated by a 'magic' bandage in a park wouldn't sound as absurd. Severe enough to need 'scy-fi magic', but not that much to the point it is too scy-fi.
I couldn't quite finish all of it in time... it's missing one alternate scene, but here's what I have for now.
Bad Third Impression
Why don’t I go to the library? There’ve been a couple books I’ve been interested in reading for a while now, anyway.
Maybe I can discuss literature with Nagato… or not.
[Scene: Kitchen]
My mother and sister aren’t around, so I leave a note on the fridge. My mother also left a note on the fridge, telling me that she left sandwiches inside it.
This must be a reward for my hard work this morning. Hooray for me.
[Scene: Library]
It appears to have been a very long time since I was in the library... since its caretakers, like those of certain bookstores, appears to be in the habit of moving everything around once every few months for whatever reason.
As a result, I spent some time wandering around the place, trying to find the sci-fi section, when...
THUMP!
????: Why...
I ran into someone, who fell over as a result of the impact.
Someone familiar. It's Girl A. She's making a very terrifying expression while rubbing the back of her head.
Girl A: Youuuuuuu.
She's also still in her school uniform... Funny, I never thought I'd meet anyone but Nagato who wears it on weekends.
...That face is really making me want to run away.
Girl A: Do you have it out for me or something!?
Kyon: ...Not particularly, no.
Actually, Girl A, if you look at it from my perspective, it's more the opposite... you're the one who keeps stealing my shoes and running into me.
Girl A: Sigh... whatever. Help me up.
...
Well, it's not out of my way or anything.
I grab her outstretched hand and haul her to her feet.
I don't get even half a 'thank-you' in return.
Kyon: ...Your hands are pretty hard, for a girl.
Girl A: Shut up. I do a lot of heavily lifting, entirely against my will.
I know how you feel, actually. I feel like I've lost weight since I've known Haruhi, although that might be due to stress rather than exercise.
Kyon: So, what brings you to the library?
Girl A: Why do you think? A library is a repository for books. People come here to read and to borrow said books. Now, given this information, it should be very easy to figure out why I'm here. Only an idiot would ever question why someone is in the library... but you're not that kind of person, right?
That snarky little...
Kyon: Well, then how is the borrowing and reading of books coming along?
I try to be civil, and she just...
Girl A: Terrible. They won't accept my library card here.
Kyon: Really? That's too bad.
Though I don't think that at all. If this person wants to borrow books, it can only be for a nefarious reason.
Girl A: So yeah, can I, um, borrow your library card?
Kyon: ...
I'm reminded of the last time I came here, with Nagato... I got her a library card back then, too. Although Girl A here is demanding the use of my card rather than the one of our own, and the general situation and atmosphere are completely different from Nagato's usual... it's almost as if I took a smaller Haruhi along instead.
Kyon: You're pretty short, huh?
Girl A: ...I'm going to pretend you didn't say that, but only because I want something from you right now.
To be honest, I feel a horrible sense of foreboding if I let this girl use my library card. It's almost like the feeling that I'll never see it again, just like with what nearly happened with my indoor shoes.
Kyon: So have you found treatment for your kleptomania yet?
Girl A: Shut up with the jokes and just give the the damned card!
...
[DECISION POINT HERE]
1)Give her the damned card.
2)Leave.
Damned Card
Sure, Girl A, take my damned card. It's not as though I was going to use it today anyway.
Oh, wait. Yes I was.
Girl A: Ah, thanks.
She snatches the card out of my hand. How courteous of her.
Girl A: I'll be a few.
Kyon: Yeah, sure.
I've grabbed a manga off of a nearby shelf and am just about to sit down in a comfortable armchair to read when Girl A returns, laden with five massive world history texts.
Kyon: Wonderful timing.
Girl A: I wanted to grab more, but they told me I could only take out five at a time...
Kyon: Dare I ask why you need these massive things so badly?
Girl A: ...Research.
Kyon: What kind of research?
Girl A: History research, moron. What else would I need history books for?
Touche.
Kyon: And let me guess: Your next request for me is to carry these wherever for you, right?
Girl A: ...
That disgruntled look tells me that I'm correct.
Kyon: ...You know, you really don't have the right to treat me like a slave. I'm not your boyfriend or anything. Hell, we're not even friends,
Girl A: ...I'm treating you like a slave?
Kyon: .........
Girl A: Okay, fair enough... why don't I carry half the books and you carry the other half? We're only going down to the station... and it's not like you have anything to do on Saturdays anyway, right?
Bored Flagless
Kyon: Goodness, it's late. I had better get going.
Girl A: H-hey! Get back here and help me, you asshole!
Ssssh. You're supposed to be quiet in a library.
Well, I guess I'll just head home... it's not like I have anything else to do.
Girl A: I hope you burn in the fires of Tartarus!
I'll update this post tomorrow.
As for now, I'm very tired.
Heh, interation between Kyons is aways fun. I wonder what Kyonk is looking so badly in the history. Is she just making sure if everyone is genderbended? Maybe learning possible differences in relation to her world to avoid razing suspicion? A nice move. Pretty Genre Savy her eh?
Anyway, Kyonko snarkness is a bit agressive this time huh? Nor she nor Kyon are usually like that, voicing their skank comments with irony. I can't blame her, sleeping two times in street is enough worse to mood of anyone. :heh: Keeping bumping in a male version of herself also don't help. It is creepy. :p
I found interesting the parallel between her and Haruhi. Despite it, I could find the main difference between them. Haruhi make Kyon do unreasonable things for her, while Kyonko mostly ask semi-reasonable things. Kyon is a guy, and Kyonko is a girl. It is only 'natural' he helping her to carry havy stuff. The libary card was a bit too much, but giving she was hesitating when she asked, I would say she knows very well how absurd the request was. She should at last add a 'please'. :p
As a last thing, Itsuko really seen to be skilled in get what she needs in strange situations. I noticed how she had new clothes but Kyonko not. I wounder if she got a spare change for her close friend?
edkedkedk
2010-01-17, 13:18
This... actually make sense. I am not sure, but these burn are still pretty severe right? Even so, being treated by a 'magic' bandage in a park wouldn't sound as absurd. Severe enough to need 'scy-fi magic', but not that much to the point it is too scy-fi.
Actually, I'm looking forward to seeing more of the 'sci-fi magic', as you call it. There are a lot of possibilities, given the number of factions existing.
-The Time Travelers: Who own the TPDD which can bend time and space, brainwashing techniques and even a time shield that protects them from the potential damage caused by the time-traveling. I'm really interested to see how they cope with the time paradoxes; we haven't seen or heard much of them.
-The 'Organization' + Tsuruya Clan: Who has an intensive network of information and contacts, much like the aforementioned Mafia and Yakuza. In fact, with their widespread coverage of the world information and technology, they seem more like the CIA. Their mysterious and powerful background means there is free rein to guess the extent of their advancements, providing nice plot devices right there in the money :)
-Data Integration Thought Entity: Who own/owns eons of knowledge and data, yet somehow, in their infinite wisdom creates Humanoid Interfaces with flaws; a) Ryoko, who is super-sociable and near-perfect except for the fact that she's impatient and doesn't understand the concept of death, b) Yuki, who is quiet, subdued, and was never meant to have any emotions in her field of observation, develops them and becomes less and less alien, and c) Emiri, who... really doesn't have much impact, despite her being Yuki's superior. Oh, the irony :eyebrow:
Then there are the twisted versions of them too (cue the Anti-SOS Brigade). So many factions in this world, vying for their own interests. Is this the same in this gender-bent world? Will this gender-bent world reveal more of their intentions and abilities? How deep are their influences? Could it be possible some of the gender-bent characters are undercover agents for different factions? I'm interested to see more.
Heh, interation between Kyons is aways fun. I wonder what Kyonk is looking so badly in the history. Is she just making sure if everyone is genderbended? Maybe learning possible differences in relation to her world to avoid razing suspicion? A nice move. Pretty Genre Savy her eh?
Logical thing to do; Check out history books to see if there are any more changes in this gender-bent world. Pretty smart of her, considering Kyon would go crazy and start asking people weird questions like in Disappearance :heh:
So many factions in this world, vying for their own interests. Is this the same in this gender-bent world?What's true for one, is true for the other, if I recall correctly.
Also, what's this about a Tiger dojo, have I missed something?
Bad Third Impression
I'm reminded of the last time I came here, with Nagato... I got her a library card back then, too. Although Girl A here is demanding the use of my card rather than the one of our own, and the general situation and atmosphere are completely different from Nagato's usual... it's almost as if I took a smaller Haruhi along instead.
Kyon: You're pretty short, huh?
Girl A: ...I'm going to pretend you didn't say that, but only because I want something from you right now.
I love the double meaning here. Short in stature, short in temper. All she needs is Rie Kugimiya and she'd be the perfect tsundere.
Also, what's this about a Tiger dojo, have I missed something?
As in, what is a Tiger Dojo, or why did it get brought up? Not sure on the latter, but if you're questioning the former: it's from Fate/Stay Night. When you got a Bad End, Taiga and Ilya would show up in the "Tiger Dojo", make some jokes and witty remarks, and often tell you why and when you screwed up. Personally, it was the only thing that kept me going during the horrible third route in that game.
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-17, 14:24
c) Emiri, who... really doesn't have much impact, despite her being Yuki's superior. Oh, the irony :eyebrow:
If her image song (http://www.animelyrics.com/anime/haruhi/fixedmind.htm) is any indication, she's pretty much in the same boat as Yuki.
I'd also like to point out the humor in simply having a male sing those lyrics, as the line where Emiri muses about being normal becomes Emori wanting to be a girl. :heh:
Stormwhite
2010-01-17, 14:37
As in, what is a Tiger Dojo, or why did it get brought up? Not sure on the latter, but if you're questioning the former: it's from Fate/Stay Night. When you got a Bad End, Taiga and Ilya would show up in the "Tiger Dojo", make some jokes and witty remarks, and often tell you why and when you screwed up. Personally, it was the only thing that kept me going during the horrible third route in that game.
You got a reward for getting all of them as well :P
Imo the best hosts for a Tiger Dojo would be the Tsuruyas, but whether that would work, I don't know.
Actually, I'm looking forward to seeing more of the 'sci-fi magic', as you call it. There are a lot of possibilities, given the number of factions existing. (...)
I am actually talking specifically about the Organization. The Time Travelers technology is certanly 'magic'. Mikuru have no idea of what is a PC and impressed that boats float. The DITE, also have 'magic' is 'tech'.
I have no problem a bit of weird devices for the Organization. Things likeyou would see in a 007 movie is awesome and fit then. But I would preffer don't seeing then having acces to too much 'magic'. Their power come from conections and agents, not that 'magic'. That being said, I preffer that Itsuko's miraculous bandage is not able to instantaneously (less then a day is 'instantaneously') heal a bullet wond on Kyon's face. I think it crossed a bit the line.
In the other hand, it just crossed a bit. They are not wielding light sabers, nor shoting lazer or protecting thenself with force fields. I preffer otai's explanation, but Kaisos original one is not that bad either.
Could it be possible some of the gender-bent characters are undercover agents for different factions? I'm interested to see more.
I believe it was what Itsuko suspected about Kyon. I is probably why she freeked out seeing the headphones. I wonder if it is not what Yuki thinks about Yuuki (and Kyonko?) as well.
Mikuru and Mitsuuru are probably completelly clueless about it, tough. :p
As in, what is a Tiger Dojo, or why did it get brought up? Not sure on the latter, but if you're questioning the former: it's from Fate/Stay Night. When you got a Bad End, Taiga and Ilya would show up in the "Tiger Dojo", make some jokes and witty remarks, and often tell you why and when you screwed up. Personally, it was the only thing that kept me going during the horrible third route in that game.
Heresy! The 3th route is awesome! Wellm I agree it can be pretty boring sometimes. The the awesome momments worth it!
Anyway, yeah, Tiger Dojo is a comedy section you get after geting a Bad End (probably a [b]Dead[b] End). The supposedly main purpose is to help the players telling then where, how and why the screwd up. However, Fate/Stay Night is so linear that it is almost point less. Exept for a few (4 or 5 in 40), all bad ends are gotten almost imediatelly after you makin a choice, so it is pretty easy just go back there and chosing another thing. You also can have one for not having enough points with the route main girl, but in the first two routes this is so hard that you will probably have to try to get it. :heh: (Taiga and Illya even lapshade it)
If her image song (http://www.animelyrics.com/anime/haruhi/fixedmind.htm) is any indication, she's pretty much in the same boat as Yuki.
I'd also like to point out the humor in simply having a male sing those lyrics, as the line where Emiri muses about being normal becomes Emori wanting to be a girl. :heh:
I love Emiri's Image Song. It is the sole reason I like her (a pitty it is probably not canon). Anyway, that is why fansubed genderbended songs are better. At last the singer can change where it make sense, making Emori whanting to be an ordinary boy insted. :heh:
Imo the best hosts for a Tiger Dojo would be the Tsuruyas, but whether that would work, I don't know.
That would also be awesome. :p I still the Computer Presidents. The Computer Loli is to awesome to be forgoten after the first few days. The same for quartet Kunikida&Taniguchi.
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-17, 15:58
At last the singer can change where it make sense, making Emori whanting to be an ordinary boy insted. :heh:
I prefer it being humorous. Not that being a girl is a joke, mind you. :p
As for the Tsuruyas-in-Tiger-Dojo thing, while I have to agree that them laughing about your screw-ups would be an awesome idea, I really don't see it happening. I'm pretty sure the use of alt!Itsuki and alt!Haruhi was decided upon as soon as the idea even came up, and I don't really see it changing. :heh:
I prefer it being humorous. Not that being a girl is a joke, mind you. :p
A boy wanting to be a girl is a joke. :p
As for the Tsuruyas-in-Tiger-Dojo thing, while I have to agree that them laughing about your screw-ups would be an awesome idea, I really don't see it happening. I'm pretty sure the use of alt!Itsuki and alt!Haruhi was decided upon as soon as the idea even came up, and I don't really see it changing. :heh:
Yeah, I also believe it is no happening. However, it is not true the alt!Itsuki and alt!Haruhi was decided as soon as the idea came up. I don't know exactly when Kaisos had the idea, but just a few days ago Danchou was stil discussing with him about another (more impratical) one.
Kaisos Erranon
2010-01-17, 18:31
Scene is updated. Kyonko is highly lulz.
I don't really understand the 'tsundere' part Kaisos talked about.
Angry Emo Haruhi, if written a certain way, would qualify as a Rie-style tsundere. Their interaction would probably end up Yuuji/Shana style.
In other words, HMPH HMPH HMPH (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=H9C0xA4FpEk).
This... actually make sense. I am not sure, but these burn are still pretty severe right? Even so, being treated by a 'magic' bandage in a park wouldn't sound as absurd. Severe enough to need 'scy-fi magic', but not that much to the point it is too scy-fi.
I see I'm really gonna have to justify the bandages. Fortunately, I recently came up with an idea!
As a last thing, Itsuko really seen to be skilled in get what she needs in strange situations. I noticed how she had new clothes but Kyonko not. I wounder if she got a spare change for her close friend?
She did, but it's something Kyonko refuses to wear. Itsuko thinks that she's so funny.
I'm really interested to see how they cope with the time paradoxes; we haven't seen or heard much of them.
You still haven't read the earlier stuff, have you?
I love the double meaning here. Short in stature, short in temper. All she needs is Rie Kugimiya and she'd be the perfect tsundere.
I didn't actually intend that, but hey, it works.
Also, we've been thinking Shizuka Itou recently. Rie is a bit much...
That would also be awesome. :p I still the Computer Presidents. The Computer Loli is to awesome to be forgoten after the first few days. The same for quartet Kunikida&Taniguchi.
They'll be back. In fact, we have another game idea that involves most of the genderbent characters that we never use.
Also, we've been thinking Shizuka Itou recently. Rie is a bit much...
So more Hinagiku style tsundere?
SgtHydra
2010-01-17, 18:43
They'll be back. In fact, we have another game idea that involves most of the genderbent characters that we never use.
Which would be...?
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-17, 18:49
It's a secret to everyone! :p
ryanasaurus0077
2010-01-17, 19:19
I hope it's not too late to apply to do voicework for the VN? Because I'd LUV to be Haruki.
dragon4dudes
2010-01-17, 19:24
I think voice work is a later thing....
DJ_RockmanX
2010-01-17, 19:25
We don't accept applications from trolls.
WordShaker
2010-01-17, 19:55
On a off-topic side note, the F/SN Tiger Dojo and magic bullet talk has caused me to think the Organization=Magus Association, which causes me to "hurr hurr."
On an on-topic normal note, Kyon's far too much of a nice guy. Being so casual in the face of an overly disgruntled Kyonko stuck in snark-mode requires something approaching sainthood.
Roger Rambo
2010-01-17, 20:22
So I've been hearing implications that in the visual novel project there's something going on between Itsuko and Mori(M).
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-17, 20:57
"Was" something, at most. If there were any sort of relationship between the two of them, it'd already be over by the time the VN starts.
CrowKenobi
2010-01-17, 21:08
I would think that any relationship would be all in Mori's imagination anyway... :p :D
Scene is updated. Kyonko is highly lulz.
I saw you added a 'please'. This make the scene somewhat funnier. :heh:
Also, the new variation is pretty good. Kyonk sedution attempt are really funny. I wonder why she is so desperated to get these books, tough.
Angry Emo Haruhi, if written a certain way, would qualify as a Rie-style tsundere. Their interaction would probably end up Yuuji/Shana style.
In other words, HMPH HMPH HMPH (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=H9C0xA4FpEk).
Oh, I got it wrong, then. Anyway, do you realize regular!Haruhi can be just as tsundere right? Also, why call Disappearancee!Haruhi "angry and emo"? She started like that, but so does regular Haruhi. She changed completly as soon Kyon told her his history.
They'll be back. In fact, we have another game idea that involves most of the genderbent characters that we never use.
Oh, I anxious for that. I am specially curious, as the genderbend!world was supposedly destroyed or something.
On an on-topic normal note, Kyon's far too much of a nice guy. Being so casual in the face of an overly disgruntled Kyonko stuck in snark-mode requires something approaching sainthood.
Kyon is already used to it, stiking with Haruhi for so long and all. :p
edkedkedk
2010-01-17, 23:33
If her image song (http://www.animelyrics.com/anime/haruhi/fixedmind.htm) is any indication, she's pretty much in the same boat as Yuki.
I could see the parallels... Yuki, silently working for Kyon in the SOS Brigade, while Emiri, silently tending to the needs of the Student Council Pres in the Student Council... Well, except for the fact that the Pres is a jerk. Not that Kyon isn't, sometimes...
The Time Travelers technology is certanly 'magic'. Mikuru have no idea of what is a PC and impressed that boats float.
Then again, Mikuru probably gets impressed with everything :eyespin: What on Earth happened to the technology of the future?!
I have no problem a bit of weird devices for the Organization. Things likeyou would see in a 007 movie is awesome and fit then. But I would preffer don't seeing then having acces to too much 'magic'. Their power come from conections and agents, not that 'magic'. That being said, I preffer that Itsuko's miraculous bandage is not able to instantaneously (less then a day is 'instantaneously') heal a bullet wond on Kyon's face. I think it crossed a bit the line.
Well, considering Kyon has gotten seriously injured only about once, being in a coma for three days, yet none of the characters could rouse him with their 'magic' (because of the whole time-traveling/alternate world thingy), I'll say you have a point; there are limits to what the characters' tech can do.
I believe it was what Itsuko suspected about Kyon. I is probably why she freeked out seeing the headphones. I wonder if it is not what Yuki thinks about Yuuki (and Kyonko?) as well.
Mikuru and Mitsuuru are probably completelly clueless about it, tough. :p
As per normal :heh: I wonder if Yuki can do a synchro with Yuuki, though. They are probably the only conscious ones during the whole thing.
You still haven't read the earlier stuff, have you?
:heh: You caught me. I'm quarter of the way through due to school commitments; thinking about printing them out to read them on the way. I must admit, though, the flowcharts were... mind-boggling :upset:
She did, but it's something Kyonko refuses to wear. Itsuko thinks that she's so funny.
I wonder why she would ever do that. Also, I was jsut wondering, have then bath since they came to the other world? Japan has public baths right? I wonder if they are expensive. I guess I girl (or, actually, anyone) woul want to bath after sleeping 2 times at street in a row.
Then again, Mikuru probably gets impressed with everything :eyespin: What on Earth happened to the technology of the future?!
Becomes so awesome they don't actually need machines anymore. Or something like that.
Well, considering Kyon has gotten seriously injured only about once, being in a coma for three days, yet none of the characters could rouse him with their 'magic' (because of the whole time-traveling/alternate world thingy), I'll say you have a point; there are limits to what the characters' tech can do.
Well, this could be hand waved saying they were trying to hide things from Haruhi (tough one would argue if having a quick recovery from a stair falling isn't more apropriated). Also, we are not really sure what happened. I mean, did Kyon really fall from stars? Was he ever injuried at all?
As per normal :heh: I wonder if Yuki can do a synchro with Yuuki, though. They are probably the only conscious ones during the whole thing.
Actually, I think they can. I doubt they woud want to, tough.
I wonder why she would ever do that. Also, I was jsut wondering, have then bath since they came to the other world? Japan has public baths right? I wonder if they are expensive. I guess I girl (or, actually, anyone) woul want to bath after sleeping 2 times at street in a row.
Even though it's not explicitly stated, they probably used the shower in the love hotel. They were there for four hours, and it took Yuuki a while to make the connection, after all.
luap1138
2010-01-18, 00:09
Wasn't the shower completely see-through though? I don't think Kyonko would want to shower in there. :heh:
It was, but desperate times call for desperate measures.
They could have used the bed sheet to cover it somehow. Yuuki was not looking, so Kyonko and Itsuko just have to watch Mitsuuru while the other was bathing.
PP:
By the way, I looked at wikipedia (not really reliable) and the public bath seens to be around 600¥, 450 the entrance and 100-200 the towel+soap/shampoo. It is not expensive and they even can keep the towel! After all, a towel is always useful in unknow places. :p
They could have used the bed sheet to cover it somehow. Yuuki was not looking, so Kyonko and Itsuko just have to watch Mitsuuru while the other was bathing.
I think Kyonko was also worried about Itsuko looking.
I couldn't quite finish all of it in time... it's missing one alternate scene, but here's what I have for now.
Bad Third Impression
Why don’t I go to the library? There’ve been a couple books I’ve been interested in reading for a while now, anyway.
Maybe I can discuss literature with Nagato… or not.
[Scene: Kitchen]
My mother and sister aren’t around, so I leave a note on the fridge. My mother also left a note on the fridge, telling me that she left sandwiches inside it.
This must be a reward for my hard work this morning. Hooray for me.
[Scene: Library]
It appears to have been a very long time since I was in the library... since its caretakers, like those of certain bookstores, appears to be in the habit of moving everything around once every few months for whatever reason.
As a result, I spent some time wandering around the place, trying to find the sci-fi section, when...
THUMP!
????: Why...
I ran into someone, who fell over as a result of the impact.
Someone familiar. It's Girl A. She's making a very terrifying expression while rubbing the back of her head.
Girl A: Youuuuuuu.
She's also still in her school uniform... Funny, I never thought I'd meet anyone but Nagato who wears it on weekends.
...That face is really making me want to run away.
Girl A: Do you have it out for me or something!?
Kyon: ...Not particularly, no.
Actually, Girl A, if you look at it from my perspective, it's more the opposite... you're the one who keeps taking my shoes and running into me.
Girl A: Sigh... whatever. Help me up.
...
Well, it's not out of my way or anything.
I grab her outstretched hand and haul her to her feet.
I don't get even half a 'thank-you' in return.
Kyon: ...Your hands are pretty hard, for a girl.
Girl A: Shut up. I do a lot of heavily lifting, entirely against my will.
I know how you feel, actually. I feel like I've lost weight since I've known Haruhi, although that might be due to stress rather than exercise.
Kyon: So, what brings you to the library?
Girl A: Why do you think? A library is a repository for books. People come here to read and to borrow said books. Now, given this information, it should be very easy to figure out why I'm here. Only an idiot would ever question why someone is in the library... but you're not that kind of person, right?
That snarky little...
Kyon: Well, then how is the borrowing and reading of books coming along?
I try to be civil, and she just...
Girl A: Terrible. They won't accept my library card here.
Kyon: Really? That's too bad.
Though I don't think that at all. If this person wants to borrow books, it can only be for a nefarious reason.
Girl A: So yeah, can I, um, borrow your library card? Please?
Kyon: ...
I'm reminded of the last time I came here, with Nagato... I got her a library card back then, too. Although Girl A here is demanding the use of my card rather than the one of her own, and the general situation and atmosphere are completely different from Nagato's usual... it's almost as if I took a smaller Haruhi along instead.
Kyon: You're pretty short, huh?
Girl A: ...I'm going to pretend you didn't say that, but only because I want something from you right now.
To be honest, I feel a horrible sense of foreboding if I let this girl use my library card. It's almost like the feeling that I'll never see it again, just like with what nearly happened with my indoor shoes.
Kyon: So have you found treatment for your kleptomania yet?
Girl A: Shut up with the jokes and just give the the damned card!
...
[DECISION POINT HERE]
1)Give her the damned card.
2)Leave.
Return of the Thief
Why don’t I go to the library? There’ve been a couple books I’ve been interested in reading for a while now, anyway.
Maybe I can discuss literature with Nagato… or not.
[Scene: Kitchen]
My mother and sister aren’t around, so I leave a note on the fridge. My mother also left a note on the fridge, telling me that she left sandwiches inside it.
This must be a reward for my hard work this morning. Hooray for me.
[Scene: Library]
It appears to have been a very long time since I was in the library... since its caretakers, like those of certain bookstores, appears to be in the habit of moving everything around once every few months for whatever reason.
As a result, I spent some time wandering around the place, trying to find the sci-fi section, when...
THUMP!
????: Why...
I ran into someone, who fell over as a result of the impact.
Someone familiar. It's Girl A. Her hands are now occupied with rubbing the back of her head while trying to pull down the hem of her skirt.
Kyon: Yo.
Girl A: Why do we keep meeting like this!? What did I do...
Kyon: Don't ask me.
I feel kinda sorry for her, so I help her up.
Girl A: Mmm, thanks. Though you could at least watch where you're going in future.
What about you!?
Girl A is still wearing the school uniform I saw her in yesterday... and it looks like it's been slept in again. Despite her best efforts to brush herself off, I can also see some dirt and grass...
...
Kyon: Just wondering... do you actually have a place to sleep? Because--
Girl A: One question.
Kyon: What?
Girl A: That's what we agreed on payment yesterday, remember? You help me with something, and I answer a question about something that's none of your business.
...I can see where this is going.
Kyon: What do you want now?
Girl A: Well, um, if it's not too much trouble... I need to borrow your library card.
...
Warning bells are going off in my head. This is the girl who nearly stole my indoor shoes and that I helped to steal an expensive monitor. If I loan her my library card, I'll probably never see it again.
Kyon: I have a better idea. If you don't have a library card, I can just get one made for you.
I'm reminded of the last time I came here, with Nagato... I got her a library card back then, too. Although Girl A is of a completely different character.
Girl A: ...That'd be giving in...
Kyon: Huh?
Girl A: Nothing. Just accept the fact that I'm not gonna bother to get my own card and just lemme use yours.
Kyon: How about no?
I'm not risking my precious library card just so you can steal books and blame it all on me, and certainly not for an answer to a question that I asked on a whim. Frankly, I don't really care where you and your thieving friends sleep, so long as it's not in my backyard.
Girl A rolls her eyes and starts muttering to herself.
Girl A: Damn it, and I can't offer money since I'm broke... I was hoping I wasn't going to have to use this technique again... should work, though...
Girl A adopts a kind of quasi-cute stance, he hands crossed over her skirt, knees bent slightly inward, and slouching forward. She looks up at me with what she probably thinks is an adorable expression. (She's right, but...)
Girl A: Could you please loan me your library card? I'd be ever so grateful to you, big brother...
Her voice oozes with honey.
Kyon: ...Guh.
Fortunately, I'm not gullible or weak enough to be tricked by an act as stupid as this. Women aren't my weak point, at least.
Kyon: ...The answer is still no. And that's not even half convincing.
She drops the facade immediately.
Girl A: Damn it, Itsuko! That's the last time I listen to you, ever! Fine, I'll have to do this my own way.
She... reaches up and puts her hands on my shoulders... and gets, uh, uncomfortably close.
Girl A: I-I-I'll g-give you a k-kiss if you-you'll just give me the c-c-c-card...
Her face, although bright red, displays an upset expression at being forced into this. It's pretty clear that once I give her the card, she'll just run away without even delivering. I shouldn't even consider this. Maybe I would if it was Asahina-san, but...
Girl A fails completely at seducing people... I'm not sure whether that's a positive thing or not.
I gently push her away.
Kyon: Look. I don't think that's a very--
Even more red.
Girl A: Ah, fine, whatever! Don't accept my g-generous offer! Just give me the damned card!
She's being so unreasonable...
...
[DECISION POINT HERE]
1)Give her the damned card.
2)Leave.
Damned Card
Sure, Girl A, take my damned card. It's not as though I was going to use it today anyway.
Oh, wait. Yes I was.
Girl A: Eh? Really! Ah, thanks, thanks.
She snatches the card out of my hand. How courteous of her.
Girl A: I'll be a few.
Kyon: Yeah, sure.
I've grabbed a manga off of a nearby shelf and am just about to sit down in a comfortable armchair to read when Girl A returns, laden with five massive world history texts.
Kyon: Wonderful timing.
Girl A: I wanted to grab more, but they told me I could only take out five at a time...
Kyon: Dare I ask why you need these massive things so badly?
Girl A: ...Research.
Kyon: What kind of research?
Girl A: History research, moron. What else would I need history books for?
Touche.
Kyon: And let me guess: Your next request for me is to carry these wherever for you, right?
Girl A: ...
That disgruntled look tells me that I'm correct.
Kyon: ...You know, you really don't have the right to treat me like a slave. I'm not your boyfriend or anything. Hell, we're not even friends
---
If Thief = True THEN
Despite you offering to kiss me earlier.
---
Girl A: ...I'm treating you like a slave?
Kyon: .........
Girl A: Okay, fair enough... why don't I carry half the books and you carry the other half? We're only going down to the station... and it's not like you have anything to do on Saturdays anyway, right?
Bored Flagless
Kyon: Goodness, it's late. I had better get going.
Girl A: H-hey! Get back here and help me, you asshole!
Ssssh. You're supposed to be quiet in a library.
Well, I guess I'll just head home... it's not like I have anything else to do.
Girl A: I hope you burn in the fires of Tartarus!
I'll update this post tomorrow.
As for now, I'm very tired.
The first version had Kyonko acting really aggressively tsuntsun towards Kyon. Quite abnormally so, I would say. But the second version balanced that out with totally entertaining incompetent flirting; so it's all good.
It sounds like Basic 101 for meeting your doppelganger from an alternate universe, you fight to establish who has dominance. :p
I see I'm really gonna have to justify the bandages. Fortunately, I recently came up with an idea!
Real first aid techniques? If Kyon did have a bullethole in his face, one of the best ways to stem the bleeding is to stuff a tampon in it. :p It would be funny to see his reaction to that when he finally removes the bandages.
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-18, 01:20
Then again, Mikuru probably gets impressed with everything :eyespin: What on Earth happened to the technology of the future?!
Becomes so awesome they don't actually need machines anymore. Or something like that.
Try and think of what life was like before electricity. That's most likely what the difference is. :heh:
Try and think of what life was like before electricity. That's most likely what the difference is. :heh:
No, it is not. It is worse. Now we have an idea of how thngs worked 1000 years ago. I mean, we probaly wouldn't be able to use weird tools they used back then. However, we wouldn't be as clueless as Mikuru.
swtrooper42
2010-01-18, 01:55
Still seems like a weird future when they don't even recognize what a boat is.
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-18, 02:04
Was just giving a general idea. Most of the things the Asahinas take for granted probably don't even exist yet. As we live in a rather heavily electricity-dependent world, I was merely giving that as an example of what a difference life could potentially be like for our future friends. :heh:
As for the boat thing... it's been brought up before that there's a chance Mikuru is simply clueless about them because she's never seen one before, and I'd like to think that's a possibility. Boats have been around for millennia, so trying to picture a future where they simply don't exist anymore is pretty hard, wouldn't you say? :p
Boats have been around for millennia, so trying to picture a future where they simply don't exist anymore is pretty hard, wouldn't you say? :p
That is my point. Mikuru's future is absolutelly alien. The technology is so absolutelly different the most basic things from present time are not around anymore. The most impressive thing is she don't know what a PC is, seeing as we just assume we will still use it (or, at last, something similar) for the next tousand years. (how many scy-fi shows don't use computers?)
besieger
2010-01-18, 02:42
Or that, they're so advanced that PCs are not needed, and central oracle computers take cares of everything with the person using it isn't even aware that he/she is accessing a computer.
DJ_RockmanX
2010-01-18, 03:01
We're off topic again. Hurry up and write something Kaisos.
edkedkedk
2010-01-18, 03:47
The first version had Kyonko acting really aggressively tsuntsun towards Kyon. Quite abnormally so, I would say. But the second version balanced that out with totally entertaining incompetent flirting; so it's all good.
Although the thought of making out with a gender-bent version of yourself is a bit, y'know, mind-boggling :heh:
Or that, they're so advanced that PCs are not needed, and central oracle computers take cares of everything with the person using it isn't even aware that he/she is accessing a computer.
Isn't it mentioned somewhere that the computers/devices the future people uses are implanted directly into their minds? In that case, it would be logical that they don't recognize much of the technology in the present... though it still doesn't explain why Mikuru doesn't know what a boat is or does :eyespin:
PP:
By the way, I looked at wikipedia (not really reliable) and the public bath seens to be around 600¥, 450 the entrance and 100-200 the towel+soap/shampoo. It is not expensive and they even can keep the towel! After all, a towel is always useful in unknow places. :pAlways know where your towel is, eh?:heh:Although the thought of making out with a gender-bent version of yourself is a bit, y'know, mind-boggling :heh:Do I even have to say it?
Although the thought of making out with a gender-bent version of yourself is a bit, y'know, mind-boggling :heh:
I'd do it.
Kaisos Erranon
2010-01-18, 06:33
I kind of always thought that the boat thing was because they no longer had oceans in Mikuru's time.
Although the thought of making out with a gender-bent version of yourself is a bit, y'know, mind-boggling :heh:
She's the main heroine... they're going to end up doing a lot more than kissing, believe me.
Anyway, new scene.
Pangs for the Memories (The Worst Pun Ever)
I need to find things to do on Saturdays. Maybe then I can surprise demanding women by informing them I have plans.
When Girl A said I would be carrying 'half the books', she actually meant that I'd be carrying three and her two. I don't need to describe how unfair this is, but I didn't complain. Out loud, of course.
In my head, I can complain all I want without her getting the least bit angry. For example, I didn't consider it before today, but books, specifically history texts, are extremely heavy. If this goes on for much longer, I think my arms are going to fall off. And we're only a hundred yards away from the library.
I feel like just dropping these things and running away. Despite what fiction may have you believe, short people are actually fairly slow, due to the length of their legs. The image of the slow, lumbering brute is completely unrealistic... if anything, the increased muscle mass would help them move even faster.
Girl A: Don't even think of running away. I know this area just as well as you do... you won't be able to hide from me for long.
Kyon: ...Why are you assuming that I'd do something like that?
Girl A: Because that's what I'd be thinking in a situation like this.
Kyon: ...? You certainly say some strange things.
Girl A: Like you don't. You're the one who talks to yourself all the time.
Kyon: You talk to yourself too!
Mysteriously, she starts sniggering uncontrollably.
...Huh?
Kyon: What's so funny...?
She manages to catch her breath.
Girl A: Something you'll never understand.
Kyon: ...Right. And why wouldn't I understand?
Girl A: It's something far beyond your level of intelligence.
Kyon: ...So you're calling me an idiot?
I swear, this woman is really asking for it.
Girl A: Well, you certainly look like one in those clothes.
Kyon: Why, what's wrong with my clothes?
Girl A: ...Looked in the mirror recently? Honestly, you look like some alleyway thug who listens to hip-hop while beating up children.
What a wonderful analogy. Where did that one come from?
Girl A: Plus, you look way too much like an, um, friend of mine.
...'Friend'? She definitely hesitated before saying that.
...I wonder. Guess I'll tease her a bit.
Kyon: Would this 'friend' happen to be your boyfriend?
Girl A nearly drops her books.
Girl A: Arrrrrgh! I don't even want to think about that right now! Thank you for making my day terrible!
Kyon: So, would that be a 'yes', or...?
Girl A: It's a no! Definitely a no! I never want to even talk to that person again! Now stop prying!
Kyon: ...Sounds more like a 'yes' to me.
In retaliation, she throws a book at my head.
---
We finally got to the SOS Brigade Meeting Place at Kitaguchi Station after nearly twenty minutes of pain without even a break. Sighing, I dump the books I'm carrying down on a nearby bench, which I then sit down on myself..
Girl A: ...Why are you stopping here?
Kyon: Why? ...It's the station, right?
---
IF Thief = True, THEN
Besides, it's where I dropped you yesterday. I figure this is a good place to say goodbye.
---
Girl A: Not this station. The other station.
Kyon: What other station!? There's like--
Girl A: Kouyouen Station. It's only a bit further. What, you can't handle it?
Kyon: ...You tricked me, you little brat. You knew I'd think it was this place... I'd never have agreed to haul these things all the way to the school!
You totally owe me answers to two questions for this.
Girl A: ...Tch. Whatever, you can't refuse now, you already agreed to help me.
Kyon: At least let me take a little break.
Girl A: ...I can't believe you need a break. Look at me, I'm perfectly fine.
Kyon: You're only carrying two books! And for that matter, they're the lightest ones!
Girl: Why are you complaining? This is about the only thing a guy is useful for. Come on, Muscles. Carry those books like you were born to do!
She encourages me like how one would encourage a dog.
I want to throw a book at her, but I resist the impulse. Not only would the sheer weight of these things probably kill her, but I'd end up dead too if the library found out we were doing this kind of thing to its precious books.
Kyon: Say whatever you want, I'm not moving until I feel like it.
And there was nothing she could do about it.
Girl A: ......
Aside from throw another book at me.
---
Just as I was getting ready to leave, however, something happened.
Stomach: Grooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaan.
Girl A's stomach began to hold a conversation with itself.
Girl A: Ow! Ow! Dammit, not again...
Kyon: Something the matter?
Girl A: Of course something's the matter! I wouldn't be doubled over in pain if everything was just peachy! I-I haven't eaten anything in over a day... this happened after we separated this morning, too.
Stomach: Grooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaan.
Girl A: Owwwww. I'm gonna die, seriously gonna die, owwww.
She really does look like she's in a lot of pain... although I'd certainly enjoy telling her to just deal with it, like she does to me, I...
Kyon: Is there anything I can--
Girl A: No, no, it's fine, great, it should pass in a...
Stomach: Grooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaan.
Girl A: Why...
...
[DECISION POINT HERE]
1)...Take pity on her and get her something to eat.
2)I need to save money. I'll just be on my way now...
Knight (I)
Kyon: Stay here and watch the books. I'll be back in five minutes.
Girl A: What are you gonna--
Stomach: Grooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaan.
I return, five minutes later, arms full of cheap, filling snacks.
Kyon: Here. Enjoy.
Girl A doesn't say a word. She just gives me a look that seems like it's about to cry from gratitude. Or maybe that was just from the pain of starvation.
After devouring the food I brought her, she finally seems to have the energy and the room in her mouth to thank me.
Girl A: Why are you so ridiculously nice? Anyone normal wouldn't even have agreed to carry these books in the first place.
I'd love to say “It's because I have a crush on you” just to see her reaction, but I don't want any more books thrown at my head. Furthermore, I don't really think I have the guts.
Girl A: I owe you so much already. I don't even know where I'm supposed to begin repaying you.
Well, you could stop being such a brat most of the time.
Kyon: ...Actually, you could start by telling me who you are and why you haven't eaten in over a day.
Girl A: ...Figured. Alright then, that's a fair trade, I suppose ...Where should I begin?
Petty, and Flagless
...I'm finished here.
Stomach: Grooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaan.
I carried her books this far, and I have other things to do. Feeding her would be beyond unreasonable, and it's entirely her problem.
I'll just quietly slip away while she's nearly in tears...
I don't make it ten feet before she notices.
Girl A: ...Exactly where are you going?
Kyon: Home
Girl A: Oi. You said you'd help carry these books, right?
Kyon: Maybe I lied? Anyway, I'll see you around. I've suddenly become really busy.
Girl A straightens up.
Girl A: Hold on a minute. You're going to leave this starving, broke, homeless girl with more books than she can reliably carry to her own devices? And this doesn't weigh on your conscience at all?
Well, I wouldn't go as far as that, but that actually sounds pretty accurate.
Girl A:...
... Her expression could strike fear into an allosaur. ...Hold on, wasn't she supposed to be having stomach cramps.
Stomach: Rooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaar.
Ah. Well, I think I'll be running away now. That sounds like a good idea.
Girl A: IDIOT!
The first book comes flying. I narrowly dodge it.
Girl A: DUMBASS!
The second book flies at my ankles. I jump over that one.
Girl A: MORON!
The third book comes flying, which is odd considering how much trouble even I had lifting it. I don't dodge that one.
...
When I came to, it was getting dark, and Girl A and the books were nowhere in sight... as was, it turned out later, all the money in my wallet.
I was also in an alleyway quite a distance from where I fell unconscious... I found it difficult to believe that she dragged me here herself.
...Maybe her 'friend' from earlier helped?
Ah well, no point into worrying about that now. What's done is done, and I think I need an asprin.
...I'll probably have to offer my apologies to Girl A the next time we meet, though. Despite what I say, I do feel kind of terrible about just leaving her there.
By the way, those thoughts were all before I found out that I had technically been mugged. I won't be apologizing to her anytime soon, believe me.
I think I'll just go home.
edkedkedk
2010-01-18, 06:51
I'd do it.
... I'm not sure how to respond to that.
She's the main heroine... they're going to end up doing a lot more than kissing, believe me.
Holy smokes! I'm hyped up for THAT! :hyper-^v^:
Girl A: ...Looked in the mirror recently? Honestly, you look like some alleyway thug who listens to hip-hop while beating up children.
Seriously a wonderful analogy!
So now we see that Kyonko = Kyon - Aversion to violence - Height + Sarcasm + Snarkiness + Bravery.
Kyon just got owned by his gender-bent self :heh:
Although the thought of making out with a gender-bent version of yourself is a bit, y'know, mind-boggling :heh:
Selfcest is fun!:eyespin:
Just so you know, I support all selfcest pairings. :rolleyes:
Isn't it mentioned somewhere that the computers/devices the future people uses are implanted directly into their minds? In that case, it would be logical that they don't recognize much of the technology in the present... though it still doesn't explain why Mikuru doesn't know what a boat is or does :eyespin:
I think it was Mikuru (big) in Book 4 when she talked about the TTPD...
or was it Book 7?
I kind of always thought that the boat thing was because they no longer had oceans in Mikuru's time.
Wait, I thought he said there was. Like, at the start of Remote Island Syndrome.
Now you know how broken I am. At least by Haruhi.
She's the main heroine... they're going to end up doing a lot more than kissing, believe me.
:eek::nono::naughty:
Anyway, new scene.
Pangs for the Memories (The Worst Pun Ever)
I need to find things to do on Saturdays. Maybe then I can surprise demanding women by informing them I have plans.
When Girl A said I would be carrying 'half the books', she actually meant that I'd be carrying three and her two. I don't need to describe how unfair this is, but I didn't complain. Out loud, of course.
In my head, I can complain all I want without her getting the least bit angry. For example, I didn't consider it before today, but books, specifically history texts, are extremely heavy. If this goes on for much longer, I think my arms are going to fall off. And we're only a hundred yards away from the library.
I feel like just dropping these things and running away. Despite what fiction may have you believe, short people are actually fairly slow, due to the length of their legs. The image of the slow, lumbering brute is completely unrealistic... if anything, the increased muscle mass would help them move even faster.
Girl A: Don't even think of running away. I know this area just as well as you do... you won't be able to hide from me for long.
Kyon: ...Why are you assuming that I'd do something like that?
Girl A: Because that's what I'd be thinking in a situation like this.
Kyon: ...? You certainly say some strange things.
Girl A: Like you don't. You're the one who talks to yourself all the time.
Kyon: You talk to yourself too!
Mysteriously, she starts sniggering uncontrollably.
...Huh?
Kyon: What's so funny...?
She manages to catch her breath.
Girl A: Something you'll never understand.
Kyon: ...Right. And why wouldn't I understand?
Girl A: It's something far beyond your level of intelligence.
Kyon: ...So you're calling me an idiot?
I swear, this woman is really asking for it.
Girl A: Well, you certainly look like one in those clothes.
Kyon: Why, what's wrong with my clothes?
Girl A: ...Looked in the mirror recently? Honestly, you look like some alleyway thug who listens to hip-hop while beating up children.
What a wonderful analogy. Where did that one come from?
Girl A: Plus, you look way too much like an, um, friend of mine.
...'Friend'? She definitely hesitated before saying that.
...I wonder. Guess I'll tease her a bit.
Kyon: Would this 'friend' happen to be your boyfriend?
Girl A nearly drops her books.
Girl A: Arrrrrgh! I don't even want to think about that right now! Thank you for making my day terrible!
Kyon: So, would that be a 'yes', or...?
Girl A: It's a no! Definitely a no! I never want to even talk to that person again! Now stop prying!
Kyon: ...Sounds more like a 'yes' to me.
In retaliation, she throws a book at my head.
---
We finally got to the SOS Brigade Meeting Place at Kitaguchi Station after nearly twenty minutes of pain without even a break. Sighing, I dump the books I'm carrying down on a nearby bench, which I then sit down on myself..
Girl A: ...Why are you stopping here?
Kyon: Why? ...It's the station, right?
---
IF Thief = True, THEN
Besides, it's where I dropped you yesterday. I figure this is a good place to say goodbye.
---
Girl A: Not this station. The other station.
Kyon: What other station!? There's like--
Girl A: Kouyouen Station. It's only a bit further. What, you can't handle it?
Kyon: ...You tricked me, you little brat. You knew I'd think it was this place... I'd never have agreed to haul these things all the way to the school!
You totally owe me answers to two questions for this.
Girl A: ...Tch. Whatever, you can't refuse now, you already agreed to help me.
Kyon: At least let me take a little break.
Girl A: ...I can't believe you need a break. Look at me, I'm perfectly fine.
Kyon: You're only carrying two books! And for that matter, they're the lightest ones!
Girl: Why are you complaining? This is about the only thing a guy is useful for. Come on, Muscles. Carry those books like you were born to do!
She encourages me like how one would encourage a dog.
I want to throw a book at her, but I resist the impulse. Not only would the sheer weight of these things probably kill her, but I'd end up dead too if the library found out we were doing this kind of thing to its precious books.
Kyon: Say whatever you want, I'm not moving until I feel like it.
And there was nothing she could do about it.
Girl A: ......
Aside from throw another book at me.
---
Just as I was getting ready to leave, however, something happened.
Stomach: Grooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaan.
Girl A's stomach began to hold a conversation with itself.
Girl A: Ow! Ow! Dammit, not again...
Kyon: Something the matter?
Girl A: Of course something's the matter! I wouldn't be doubled over in pain if everything was just peachy! I-I haven't eaten anything in over a day... this happened after we separated this morning, too.
Stomach: Grooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaan.
Girl A: Owwwww. I'm gonna die, seriously gonna die, owwww.
She really does look like she's in a lot of pain... although I'd certainly enjoy telling her to just deal with it, like she does to me, I...
Kyon: Is there anything I can--
Girl A: No, no, it's fine, great, it should pass in a...
Stomach: Grooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaan.
Girl A: Why...
...
[DECISION POINT HERE]
1)...Take pity on her and get her something to eat.
2)I need to save money. I'll just be on my way now...
Knight (I)
Kyon: Stay here and watch the books. I'll be back in five minutes.
Girl A: What are you gonna--
Stomach: Grooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaan.
I return, five minutes later, arms full of cheap, filling snacks.
Kyon: Here. Enjoy.
Girl A doesn't say a word. She just gives me a look that seems like it's about to cry from gratitude. Or maybe that was just from the pain of starvation.
After devouring the food I brought her, she finally seems to have the energy and the room in her mouth to thank me.
Girl A: Why are you so ridiculously nice? Anyone normal wouldn't even have agreed to carry these books in the first place.
I'd love to say “It's because I have a crush on you” just to see her reaction, but I don't want any more books thrown at my head. Furthermore, I don't really think I have the guts.
Girl A: I owe you so much already. I don't even know where I'm supposed to begin repaying you.
Well, you could stop being such a brat most of the time.
Kyon: ...Actually, you could start by telling me who you are and why you haven't eaten in over a day.
Girl A: ...Figured. Alright then, that's a fair trade, I suppose ...Where should I begin?
Petty, and Flagless
...I'm finished here.
Stomach: Grooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaan.
I carried her books this far, and I have other things to do. Feeding her would be beyond unreasonable, and it's entirely her problem.
I'll just quietly slip away while she's nearly in tears...
I don't make it ten feet before she notices.
Girl A: ...Exactly where are you going?
Kyon: Home
Girl A: Oi. You said you'd help carry these books, right?
Kyon: Maybe I lied? Anyway, I'll see you around. I've suddenly become really busy.
Girl A straightens up.
Girl A: Hold on a minute. You're going to leave this starving, broke, homeless girl with more books than she can reliably carry to her own devices? And this doesn't weigh on your conscience at all?
Well, I wouldn't go as far as that, but that actually sounds pretty accurate.
Girl A:...
... Her expression could strike fear into an allosaur. ...Hold on, wasn't she supposed to be having stomach cramps.
Stomach: Rooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaar.
Ah. Well, I think I'll be running away now. That sounds like a good idea.
Girl A: IDIOT!
The first book comes flying. I narrowly dodge it.
Girl A: DUMBASS!
The second book flies at my ankles. I jump over that one.
Girl A: MORON!
The third book comes flying, which is odd considering how much trouble even I had lifting it. I don't dodge that one.
...
When I came to, it was getting dark, and Girl A and the books were nowhere in sight... as was, it turned out later, all the money in my wallet.
I was also in an alleyway quite a distance from where I fell unconscious... I found it difficult to believe that she dragged me here herself.
...Maybe her 'friend' from earlier helped?
Ah well, no point into worrying about that now. What's done is done, and I think I need an asprin.
...I'll probably have to offer my apologies to Girl A the next time we meet, though. Despite what I say, I do feel kind of terrible about just leaving her there.
By the way, those thoughts were all before I found out that I had technically been mugged. I won't be apologizing to her anytime soon, believe me.
I think I'll just go home.
Hmmm..... I suppose taht the stomach pangs were gonna be a bit more....subtle. But, I guess this was what the lame pun was for :p
Meh. Would you mug YOUR alternate self?
edkedkedk
2010-01-18, 06:55
Meh. Would you mug YOUR alternate self?
I'm surprised. You support selfcest but you won't mug your alternate self?
I would :heh:
Pangs for the Memories (The Worst Pun Ever)
I need to find things to do on Saturdays. Maybe then I can surprise demanding women by informing them I have plans.
When Girl A said I would be carrying 'half the books', she actually meant that I'd be carrying three and her two. I don't need to describe how unfair this is, but I didn't complain. Out loud, of course.
In my head, I can complain all I want without her getting the least bit angry. For example, I didn't consider it before today, but books, specifically history texts, are extremely heavy. If this goes on for much longer, I think my arms are going to fall off. And we're only a hundred yards away from the library.
I feel like just dropping these things and running away. Despite what fiction may have you believe, short people are actually fairly slow, due to the length of their legs. The image of the slow, lumbering brute is completely unrealistic... if anything, the increased muscle mass would help them move even faster.
Girl A: Don't even think of running away. I know this area just as well as you do... you won't be able to hide from me for long.
Kyon: ...Why are you assuming that I'd do something like that?
Girl A: Because that's what I'd be thinking in a situation like this.
Kyon: ...? You certainly say some strange things.
Girl A: Like you don't. You're the one who talks to yourself all the time.
Kyon: You talk to yourself too!
Mysteriously, she starts sniggering uncontrollably.
...Huh?
Kyon: What's so funny...?
She manages to catch her breath.
Girl A: Something you'll never understand.
Kyon: ...Right. And why wouldn't I understand?
Girl A: It's something far beyond your level of intelligence.
Kyon: ...So you're calling me an idiot?
I swear, this woman is really asking for it.
Girl A: Well, you certainly look like one in those clothes.
Kyon: Why, what's wrong with my clothes?
Girl A: ...Looked in the mirror recently? Honestly, you look like some alleyway thug who listens to hip-hop while beating up children.
What a wonderful analogy. Where did that one come from?
Girl A: Plus, you look way too much like an, um, friend of mine.
...'Friend'? She definitely hesitated before saying that.
...I wonder. Guess I'll tease her a bit.
Kyon: Would this 'friend' happen to be your boyfriend?
Girl A nearly drops her books.
Girl A: Arrrrrgh! I don't even want to think about that right now! Thank you for making my day terrible!
Kyon: So, would that be a 'yes', or...?
Girl A: It's a no! Definitely a no! I never want to even talk to that person again! Now stop prying!
Kyon: ...Sounds more like a 'yes' to me.
In retaliation, she throws a book at my head.
---
We finally got to the SOS Brigade Meeting Place at Kitaguchi Station after nearly twenty minutes of pain without even a break. Sighing, I dump the books I'm carrying down on a nearby bench, which I then sit down on myself..
Girl A: ...Why are you stopping here?
Kyon: Why? ...It's the station, right?
---
IF Thief = True, THEN
Besides, it's where I dropped you yesterday. I figure this is a good place to say goodbye.
---
Girl A: Not this station. The other station.
Kyon: What other station!? There's like--
Girl A: Kouyouen Station. It's only a bit further. What, you can't handle it?
Kyon: ...You tricked me, you little brat. You knew I'd think it was this place... I'd never have agreed to haul these things all the way to the school!
You totally owe me answers to two questions for this.
Girl A: ...Tch. Whatever, you can't refuse now, you already agreed to help me.
Kyon: At least let me take a little break.
Girl A: ...I can't believe you need a break. Look at me, I'm perfectly fine.
Kyon: You're only carrying two books! And for that matter, they're the lightest ones!
Girl: Why are you complaining? This is about the only thing a guy is useful for. Come on, Muscles. Carry those books like you were born to do!
She encourages me like how one would encourage a dog.
I want to throw a book at her, but I resist the impulse. Not only would the sheer weight of these things probably kill her, but I'd end up dead too if the library found out we were doing this kind of thing to its precious books.
Kyon: Say whatever you want, I'm not moving until I feel like it.
And there was nothing she could do about it.
Girl A: ......
Aside from throw another book at me.
---
Just as I was getting ready to leave, however, something happened.
Stomach: Grooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaan.
Girl A's stomach began to hold a conversation with itself.
Girl A: Ow! Ow! Dammit, not again...
Kyon: Something the matter?
Girl A: Of course something's the matter! I wouldn't be doubled over in pain if everything was just peachy! I-I haven't eaten anything in over a day... this happened after we separated this morning, too.
Stomach: Grooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaan.
Girl A: Owwwww. I'm gonna die, seriously gonna die, owwww.
She really does look like she's in a lot of pain... although I'd certainly enjoy telling her to just deal with it, like she does to me, I...
Kyon: Is there anything I can--
Girl A: No, no, it's fine, great, it should pass in a...
Stomach: Grooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaan.
Girl A: Why...
...
[DECISION POINT HERE]
1)...Take pity on her and get her something to eat.
2)I need to save money. I'll just be on my way now...
Knight (I)
Kyon: Stay here and watch the books. I'll be back in five minutes.
Girl A: What are you gonna--
Stomach: Grooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaan.
I return, five minutes later, arms full of cheap, filling snacks.
Kyon: Here. Enjoy.
Girl A doesn't say a word. She just gives me a look that seems like it's about to cry from gratitude. Or maybe that was just from the pain of starvation.
After devouring the food I brought her, she finally seems to have the energy and the room in her mouth to thank me.
Girl A: Why are you so ridiculously nice? Anyone normal wouldn't even have agreed to carry these books in the first place.
I'd love to say “It's because I have a crush on you” just to see her reaction, but I don't want any more books thrown at my head. Furthermore, I don't really think I have the guts.
Girl A: I owe you so much already. I don't even know where I'm supposed to begin repaying you.
Well, you could stop being such a brat most of the time.
Kyon: ...Actually, you could start by telling me who you are and why you haven't eaten in over a day.
Girl A: ...Figured. Alright then, that's a fair trade, I suppose ...Where should I begin?
Petty, and Flagless
...I'm finished here.
Stomach: Grooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaan.
I carried her books this far, and I have other things to do. Feeding her would be beyond unreasonable, and it's entirely her problem.
I'll just quietly slip away while she's nearly in tears...
I don't make it ten feet before she notices.
Girl A: ...Exactly where are you going?
Kyon: Home
Girl A: Oi. You said you'd help carry these books, right?
Kyon: Maybe I lied? Anyway, I'll see you around. I've suddenly become really busy.
Girl A straightens up.
Girl A: Hold on a minute. You're going to leave this starving, broke, homeless girl with more books than she can reliably carry to her own devices? And this doesn't weigh on your conscience at all?
Well, I wouldn't go as far as that, but that actually sounds pretty accurate.
Girl A:...
... Her expression could strike fear into an allosaur. ...Hold on, wasn't she supposed to be having stomach cramps.
Stomach: Rooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaar.
Ah. Well, I think I'll be running away now. That sounds like a good idea.
Girl A: IDIOT!
The first book comes flying. I narrowly dodge it.
Girl A: DUMBASS!
The second book flies at my ankles. I jump over that one.
Girl A: MORON!
The third book comes flying, which is odd considering how much trouble even I had lifting it. I don't dodge that one.
...
When I came to, it was getting dark, and Girl A and the books were nowhere in sight... as was, it turned out later, all the money in my wallet.
I was also in an alleyway quite a distance from where I fell unconscious... I found it difficult to believe that she dragged me here herself.
...Maybe her 'friend' from earlier helped?
Ah well, no point into worrying about that now. What's done is done, and I think I need an asprin.
...I'll probably have to offer my apologies to Girl A the next time we meet, though. Despite what I say, I do feel kind of terrible about just leaving her there.
By the way, those thoughts were all before I found out that I had technically been mugged. I won't be apologizing to her anytime soon, believe me.
I think I'll just go home.
Lovely scene. Too bad my throat's effed up today, so I couldn't laugh as much as I wanted to.
I'm surprised. You support selfcest but you won't mug your alternate self?
I would :heh:
And since when did selfcest=stealing from yourself?
Ok, I admit that sounds a bit wrong....:rolleyes:
No I won't mug myself.
But putting myself in Kyonko's situation, if I had been sleeping 2 days in the streets with stomach pangs that pierced the heavens and some guy who was actually me agreed to help (albeit without telling him which train station) walked out on me, I would.
And I would enjoy it. :D
edkedkedk
2010-01-18, 07:42
And since when did selfcest=stealing from yourself?
Ok, I admit that sounds a bit wrong....:rolleyes:
Self-cest and mugging yourself is two different levels of wrong, my friend. Clearly, we have different views on that :heh:
No I won't mug myself.
But putting myself in Kyonko's situation, if I had been sleeping 2 days in the streets with stomach pangs that pierced the heavens and some guy who was actually me agreed to help (albeit without telling him which train station) walked out on me, I would.
And I would enjoy it. :D
I would just take it that I'm 'borrowing' money from my alternate self. Hey, technically we're the same person, right?
sorry for double posting (and way too many posts for the last few pages),
but if there's going to be something happening with Kyon and Kyonko, WHAT IF HARUKI OR HARUHI FOUND OUT?
anyways, sorry. I'll be taking a short vacation from posting to make up.
EDIT: forget the double post
... I'm not sure how to respond to that.
Oh come on.
It'd be interesting at the very least to see if you did exactly the same thing at exactly the same time.
Or did what the other wanted you to. XD
Magnificate
2010-01-18, 08:54
Would you mug kiss YOUR alternate self?
Ekhem... According to TV Tropes (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/AttractiveBentGender) there is high probability she would be hot as hell. I might feel tempted to experiment a bit. Since she would be reasonably similar to me, she might want to try it as well. Once. And never talk about it again. :eyespin:
Kyon: Would this 'friend' happen to be your boyfriend?
Score for Kyon! I half-expected Kyonko to retort "And that unreasonable woman you mentioned is your girlfriend, yes?"
Pangs for the Memories (The Worst Pun Ever)
I need to find things to do on Saturdays. Maybe then I can surprise demanding women by informing them I have plans.
When Girl A said I would be carrying 'half the books', she actually meant that I'd be carrying three and her two. I don't need to describe how unfair this is, but I didn't complain. Out loud, of course.
In my head, I can complain all I want without her getting the least bit angry. For example, I didn't consider it before today, but books, specifically history texts, are extremely heavy. If this goes on for much longer, I think my arms are going to fall off. And we're only a hundred yards away from the library.
I feel like just dropping these things and running away. Despite what fiction may have you believe, short people are actually fairly slow, due to the length of their legs. The image of the slow, lumbering brute is completely unrealistic... if anything, the increased muscle mass would help them move even faster.
Girl A: Don't even think of running away. I know this area just as well as you do... you won't be able to hide from me for long.
Kyon: ...Why are you assuming that I'd do something like that?
Girl A: Because that's what I'd be thinking in a situation like this.
Kyon: ...? You certainly say some strange things.
Girl A: Like you don't. You're the one who talks to yourself all the time.
Kyon: You talk to yourself too!
Mysteriously, she starts sniggering uncontrollably.
...Huh?
Kyon: What's so funny...?
She manages to catch her breath.
Girl A: Something you'll never understand.
Kyon: ...Right. And why wouldn't I understand?
Girl A: It's something far beyond your level of intelligence.
Kyon: ...So you're calling me an idiot?
I swear, this woman is really asking for it.
Girl A: Well, you certainly look like one in those clothes.
Kyon: Why, what's wrong with my clothes?
Girl A: ...Looked in the mirror recently? Honestly, you look like some alleyway thug who listens to hip-hop while beating up children.
What a wonderful analogy. Where did that one come from?
Girl A: Plus, you look way too much like an, um, friend of mine.
...'Friend'? She definitely hesitated before saying that.
...I wonder. Guess I'll tease her a bit.
Kyon: Would this 'friend' happen to be your boyfriend?
Girl A nearly drops her books.
Girl A: Arrrrrgh! I don't even want to think about that right now! Thank you for making my day terrible!
Kyon: So, would that be a 'yes', or...?
Girl A: It's a no! Definitely a no! I never want to even talk to that person again! Now stop prying!
Kyon: ...Sounds more like a 'yes' to me.
In retaliation, she throws a book at my head.
---
We finally got to the SOS Brigade Meeting Place at Kitaguchi Station after nearly twenty minutes of pain without even a break. Sighing, I dump the books I'm carrying down on a nearby bench, which I then sit down on myself..
Girl A: ...Why are you stopping here?
Kyon: Why? ...It's the station, right?
---
IF Thief = True, THEN
Besides, it's where I dropped you yesterday. I figure this is a good place to say goodbye.
---
Girl A: Not this station. The other station.
Kyon: What other station!? There's like--
Girl A: Kouyouen Station. It's only a bit further. What, you can't handle it?
Kyon: ...You tricked me, you little brat. You knew I'd think it was this place... I'd never have agreed to haul these things all the way to the school!
You totally owe me answers to two questions for this.
Girl A: ...Tch. Whatever, you can't refuse now, you already agreed to help me.
Kyon: At least let me take a little break.
Girl A: ...I can't believe you need a break. Look at me, I'm perfectly fine.
Kyon: You're only carrying two books! And for that matter, they're the lightest ones!
Girl: Why are you complaining? This is about the only thing a guy is useful for. Come on, Muscles. Carry those books like you were born to do!
She encourages me like how one would encourage a dog.
I want to throw a book at her, but I resist the impulse. Not only would the sheer weight of these things probably kill her, but I'd end up dead too if the library found out we were doing this kind of thing to its precious books.
Kyon: Say whatever you want, I'm not moving until I feel like it.
And there was nothing she could do about it.
Girl A: ......
Aside from throw another book at me.
---
Just as I was getting ready to leave, however, something happened.
Stomach: Grooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaan.
Girl A's stomach began to hold a conversation with itself.
Girl A: Ow! Ow! Dammit, not again...
Kyon: Something the matter?
Girl A: Of course something's the matter! I wouldn't be doubled over in pain if everything was just peachy! I-I haven't eaten anything in over a day... this happened after we separated this morning, too.
Stomach: Grooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaan.
Girl A: Owwwww. I'm gonna die, seriously gonna die, owwww.
She really does look like she's in a lot of pain... although I'd certainly enjoy telling her to just deal with it, like she does to me, I...
Kyon: Is there anything I can--
Girl A: No, no, it's fine, great, it should pass in a...
Stomach: Grooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaan.
Girl A: Why...
...
[DECISION POINT HERE]
1)...Take pity on her and get her something to eat.
2)I need to save money. I'll just be on my way now...
Knight (I)
Kyon: Stay here and watch the books. I'll be back in five minutes.
Girl A: What are you gonna--
Stomach: Grooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaan.
I return, five minutes later, arms full of cheap, filling snacks.
Kyon: Here. Enjoy.
Girl A doesn't say a word. She just gives me a look that seems like it's about to cry from gratitude. Or maybe that was just from the pain of starvation.
After devouring the food I brought her, she finally seems to have the energy and the room in her mouth to thank me.
Girl A: Why are you so ridiculously nice? Anyone normal wouldn't even have agreed to carry these books in the first place.
I'd love to say “It's because I have a crush on you” just to see her reaction, but I don't want any more books thrown at my head. Furthermore, I don't really think I have the guts.
Girl A: I owe you so much already. I don't even know where I'm supposed to begin repaying you.
Well, you could stop being such a brat most of the time.
Kyon: ...Actually, you could start by telling me who you are and why you haven't eaten in over a day.
Girl A: ...Figured. Alright then, that's a fair trade, I suppose ...Where should I begin?
Petty, and Flagless
...I'm finished here.
Stomach: Grooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaan.
I carried her books this far, and I have other things to do. Feeding her would be beyond unreasonable, and it's entirely her problem.
I'll just quietly slip away while she's nearly in tears...
I don't make it ten feet before she notices.
Girl A: ...Exactly where are you going?
Kyon: Home
Girl A: Oi. You said you'd help carry these books, right?
Kyon: Maybe I lied? Anyway, I'll see you around. I've suddenly become really busy.
Girl A straightens up.
Girl A: Hold on a minute. You're going to leave this starving, broke, homeless girl with more books than she can reliably carry to her own devices? And this doesn't weigh on your conscience at all?
Well, I wouldn't go as far as that, but that actually sounds pretty accurate.
Girl A:...
... Her expression could strike fear into an allosaur. ...Hold on, wasn't she supposed to be having stomach cramps.
Stomach: Rooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaar.
Ah. Well, I think I'll be running away now. That sounds like a good idea.
Girl A: IDIOT!
The first book comes flying. I narrowly dodge it.
Girl A: DUMBASS!
The second book flies at my ankles. I jump over that one.
Girl A: MORON!
The third book comes flying, which is odd considering how much trouble even I had lifting it. I don't dodge that one.
...
When I came to, it was getting dark, and Girl A and the books were nowhere in sight... as was, it turned out later, all the money in my wallet.
I was also in an alleyway quite a distance from where I fell unconscious... I found it difficult to believe that she dragged me here herself.
...Maybe her 'friend' from earlier helped?
Ah well, no point into worrying about that now. What's done is done, and I think I need an asprin.
...I'll probably have to offer my apologies to Girl A the next time we meet, though. Despite what I say, I do feel kind of terrible about just leaving her there.
By the way, those thoughts were all before I found out that I had technically been mugged. I won't be apologizing to her anytime soon, believe me.
I think I'll just go home.
Hmm, this scene was weird. The normal path (i.e. the one in which you are not a jerk) is normal. Kyonko is a bit too tsundereish but I can understand her bad mood. And it is only natural eventually realizing how much of a jerk she was being and how nice Kyon was.
But the other option was a bit weird. Starting with Kyon passing off from a book on his head. It shouldn't be that easy. The book is heavy, but Kyonko is not that strong. And what happened to Kyon miraculous evading skills?
The weirdest part is Kyonko mugging him, however. Actually, I believe it wasn't the case. She probably just leave he unconcious there and went 'home'. Then some random delinquent saw the oportunity and rob the guy. I really don't believe Kyonko would be that much of a jerk. Stealing a bit of money to eat? Maybe. Dragging him to an alley and just leave he there? Unlikely.
Actually, reading again, Kyon also don't believe she would be able to drag him. He tought it was Haruki (the 'friend' form erlier), but we know it wasn't. I found unlikely any other member of the Brigade would do that as well.
So now we see that Kyonko = Kyon - Aversion to violence - Height + Sarcasm + Snarkiness + Bravery.
Kyon just got owned by his gender-bent self :heh:
Nah. Kyon is just as snarky and brave as Kyonko. He is not as sarcastic, but he had never been sleeping in streets in another world. Kyon can also be violent when he is really pissed. But I guess being a girl in anime wolrd give you the right to be violent to any guy. :heh:
Hmmm..... I suppose taht the stomach pangs were gonna be a bit more....subtle. But, I guess this was what the lame pun was for :p
Meh. Would you mug YOUR alternate self?
No. Nor I think Kyonko would. Remember, she couldn't have dragged Kyon to the alley, and you know Haruki didn't helped.
but if there's going to be something happening with Kyon and Kyonko, WHAT IF HARUKI OR HARUHI FOUND OUT?
Haruki would probably be so joyful he found Kyonko he wouldn't mind. Or maybe he would try to 'impress' her summoning shinjis to beat Kyon or something. You should read the old scenes, btw. :p
For Haruhi, well, I guess this is bound to happen. :heh: She will not be happy.
PP:
By the way, I didn't get at all the pun. :heh:
dragon4dudes
2010-01-18, 10:59
Nice scene Kaisos. Though I don't think Kyonko would have the strength to throw a heavy text. Then again, it could be 1337 adrenaline P0WUHZ from being angry.
Nah. Kyon is just as snarky and brave as Kyonko. He is not as sarcastic, but he had never been sleeping in streets in another world. Kyon can also be violent when he is really pissed. But I guess being a girl in anime wolrd give you the right to be violent to any guy. :heh:
Especially if that guy happens to be one you like. :heh:
PP:
By the way, I didn't get at all the pun. :heh:There's a song, "Thanks for the memories".
EDIT: Video (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=thMpcWf0Wi8)
swtrooper42
2010-01-18, 12:53
PP:
By the way, I didn't get at all the pun. :heh:
It has to deal with "pangs" you get in your stomach when you're hungry. A synonym would be "stomach pains" but pangs is the correct term.
Haha.
I love bad puns.
dragon4dudes
2010-01-18, 12:54
Aren't all puns bad?
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-18, 13:12
There are some good puns... it's just that the bad ones are more prevalent. :heh:
Kaisos Erranon
2010-01-18, 14:02
But the other option was a bit weird. Starting with Kyon passing off from a book on his head. It shouldn't be that easy. The book is heavy, but Kyonko is not that strong. And what happened to Kyon miraculous evading skills?
Big, huge history text. Kyon can't dodge EVERYTHING, he's not Vino (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6BprW6rC5mo).
The weirdest part is Kyonko mugging him, however. Actually, I believe it wasn't the case. She probably just leave he unconcious there and went 'home'. Then some random delinquent saw the oportunity and rob the guy. I really don't believe Kyonko would be that much of a jerk. Stealing a bit of money to eat? Maybe. Dragging him to an alley and just leave he there? Unlikely.
Actually, reading again, Kyon also don't believe she would be able to drag him. He tought it was Haruki (the 'friend' form erlier), but we know it wasn't. I found unlikely any other member of the Brigade would do that as well.
Kyonko doesn't really consider Kyon to be a human being yet... most of the time, she seems him as just another aspect of herself, which is why it's okay to steal from him, like someone else said.
And it was Yuuki and Mitsuuru who dragged him into the alleyway. Mitsuuru's idea.
Nice scene Kaisos. Though I don't think Kyonko would have the strength to throw a heavy text. Then again, it could be 1337 adrenaline P0WUHZ from being angry.
Kyonko, as a tsundere, is surprisingly strong when angry.
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-18, 14:39
Kyonko, as a tsundere, is surprisingly strong when angry.
That and Rule Of Funny (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/RuleOfFunny). :p
Big, huge history text. Kyon can't dodge EVERYTHING, he's not Vino (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6BprW6rC5mo).
It is you who likes to tell he can dodge anything. :heh: Anyway, people don't pass out that easy do they? I can't really tell, but I find unlikely. Not arguing to much, however. You can always tell he also hit his head on some edge while falling.
Kyonko doesn't really consider Kyon to be a human being yet... most of the time, she seems him as just another aspect of herself, which is why it's okay to steal from him, like someone else said.
And it was Yuuki and Mitsuuru who dragged him into the alleyway. Mitsuuru's idea.
I... feel it is incredible OOC for Kyonko (not really for Mituuru, tough. :heh:). Even if she don't feel remorse for stealing him (his money is kinda her money I guess), I seriously believe she would be more kind to his body. As you said, another aspect of herself. Maybe lieing him confortably on some bench.
PP:
There's a song, "Thanks for the memories".
EDIT: Video (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=thMpcWf0Wi8)
It has to deal with "pangs" you get in your stomach when you're hungry. A synonym would be "stomach pains" but pangs is the correct term.
I see. Thanks for the info.
Iaevuous
2010-01-18, 15:37
It is you who likes to tell he can dodge anything. :heh:
Maybe he simply wasn't "sufficiently motivated™"?
Anyway, people don't pass out that easy do they?.
I think I read somewhere that it's easier to give them a concussion than to knock people out by hitting them on the head. KOing by oxygen deprivation (i.e., choking) would be slightly easier than that, but... either way, mess up and it's fatal.
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-18, 16:11
Kyon is rather noticeably hard to kill, though. Largely because there's at least two reality-altering girls in his life who would prefer him being alive.
dragon4dudes
2010-01-18, 16:21
So Haruhi and Yuki at the very least. Ryoko wanted to kill him, Kimidori is too minor a character and I can't make an accurate judgment about her, Mikuru is useless and can't noticeably change reality,
Sasaki for possible goddess, and Kuyou probably doesn't care.
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-18, 16:30
Technically, Ryoko wanted to provoke a reaction from Haruhi, she never wanted to specifically kill Kyon. As loud as Haruhi is, she probably overheard her desire to have a mysterious killing take place in the school and figured that killing Kyon would be the easiest way for Haruhi to find out about it.
Also... this thread pretty much reeks of spoilers, so I don't thing spoiler tags are needed here. :heh:
*e* Of course... given the fact that Kuyoh is pretty much the only person I can remember actually complimenting Kyon's appearance, she probably wouldn't want him dying either.
*e2* Okay, that's enough with the off topic stuff. (Especially things like that pistol. :heh:)
dragon4dudes
2010-01-18, 16:35
Oh yeah, forgot about the spoiler thing. It's even mentioned in the thread title. :p
*edit*Really? Kuyoh complemented Kyon's appearance? :eyebrow: Huh, I really need to reread the novels. I'm just too lazy. :heh:
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Hey cool, I made an ascii pistol.... Don't ask though, I was bored.
Maybe he simply wasn't "sufficiently motivated™"?
Fair enough. I was joking, however. :p It is something Kaisos like to repeat.
I think I read somewhere that it's easier to give them a concussion than to knock people out by hitting them on the head. KOing by oxygen deprivation (i.e., choking) would be slightly easier than that, but... either way, mess up and it's fatal.
Eeeh, ok, whatever. Kyon is also very lucky, after all. :heh: As I say, even if a book is not enough, you could always say he fell and hit the head.
*edit*Really? Kuyoh complemented Kyon's appearance? :eyebrow: Huh, I really need to reread the novels. I'm just too lazy. :heh:
"Eyes_____ very _____ pretty."
So, yeah. She find Kyon's eyes pretty, for some reason.
PP:
Holy Cow! We are already off topic again! How we do that so quickly? :heh:
dragon4dudes
2010-01-18, 17:18
We are Seitenkan! That's why we derail from the "topic" so quickly. No other reason is sufficient.
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-18, 17:21
And then people start getting hit with warnings, violations and bans. Enough with the off-topic material, especially the stuff that either would fit better in other threads (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?t=83061) or have no reason to be on a message board.
Kaisos Erranon
2010-01-19, 01:43
Thank you, Kogetsu. In the interests of saving the thread, I have something you can all discuss.
Girl A's Story
It all began when I, um, moved to this town half a year ago. It was here that my parents finally decided to break up after having bickered for seventeen years straight. Unfortunately, for some reason it was my father who got custody. He's an, um, alcoholic, you see.
Don't interrupt me until I'm finished!
He always liked my little brother better than me, maybe because I wasn't exactly the most cooperative person... we ended up bickering more than he and my mom did. So, last month, we had a huge argument and he finally kicked me out of the house. Don't you feel sorry for me now?
No, I obviously didn't think of calling child services! Shut up and carry those books!
I really don't have any friends, so there was no one I could rely on to take me in... so I just wandered the streets for a few days... until he, my 'friend' found me.
You see, it turns out there's an, er, entire underground organization of orphaned and disowned kids in this city, who operate in secret, yeah. And yes, that is why you've never heard of them. Secret.
And, so yeah, I've been working for them for about three weeks now, gathering supplies and looking after some of the younger members. When given this explanation, my admittedly odd behaviour makes perfect sense, right?
Kyon: Like hell it does! You just made that up on the spot!
Girl A: Tch.
---
Kyon: To begin with, what use can a secret underground network of teenagers make of history textbooks!? And furthermore, doesn't that mean that you won't be returning them to the library!? I'm not paying for all of these!
I don't even want to think about the cost...
Kyon: And you were supposed to answer my questions, not make up crap! If you don't want to tell me what actually happened, just say so, and we'll come up with some other method of payment. You don't need to lie.
Girl A: ...Whatever. It's the truth, and if you don't want to believe it, that's your problem. Anyway, we're here.
Kyon: You can't expect-- oh, so we are.
We're in the tiny park near Nagato's apartment... this really does seem to be the official meeting place for strange people.
Kyon: I don't see your fellow 'members'.
Girl A: ...They'll be coming by later... in the meantime, give me those books.
Finally!
Girl A goes over to a nearby park bench and places the books underneath it. She then pulls out what appears to be some kind of prayer slip and sticks it on top of the books.
...?
Girl A: That should do it.
Curious, I move closer, to find that there's also a disorganized pile of both male and female school uniforms beneath the bench, next to some bright green garment, both of which also have prayer slips stuck on top of them. No, wait, not just school uniforms... there also appears to be underwear in the pile as well... I can see both a purple and a black bra.
Girl A: ...! Don't you dare ask which one is mine!
Kyon: Well, it obviously isn't the purple one... it's much too big for you.
I'm going to regret having said that.
Argh! She... she kicked me in the shin... That hurts, dammit!
Girl A: Why are you still here, anyway!? I thought you'd just book it the minute I was done with you... you've been muttering about it the whole way!
Kyon: ...I wanted to see if there was anything else Milady needed, since she seems to need help with everything... also, you really still haven't paid me.
Girl A: Why are you still complaining? Is that all you're good for? Even if you believe I made it up, that story was definitely good enough to clear our debts!
Kyon: Not after I bought your aching stomach all that food! That story's not even worth a hundredth of what I just spent on you!
I expect her to retort with some other inane statement, but... she just deflates, shrugs, and sits down on the bench.
Girl A: I guess you're right about that... so what do you want from me, then? I can't give you any money, and you've probably realized that I'm not supposed to tell you about my current predicament, right? I mean, I-I guess there's other ways I could pay you back, but, that's...
I sit down next to her.
Kyon: Sigh... I don't need anything.
Girl A: Hey, hold on, don't suddenly turn all selfless. I'm sure we can come to some sorta agreement.
Kyon: No, I bought you food and helped you carry these books here because I felt like it. I really don't need anything from you.
Really... I could have walked away at any time... it was all done on a whim and a misguided sense of chivalry.
Girl A: ...You said something like this yesterday, too, and I still can't believe it.
Kyon: Why not? Has your life been so miserable that you can't believe people do things without wanting to be rewarded?
Girl A: Of course not... It's just... I can't see myself helping anyone like that.
Now that's something I can definitely believe.
Kyon: Well, I guess that's just part of what makes us different people.
Girl A: ......What did you say?
Kyon: Something pointless, probably. I was just running my... ...What's wrong?
For she suddenly looked as though she was on the verge of tears.
Girl A: Nothing. Nothing at all. Why would it be anything?
...
We sat in silence for a while.
Until she noticed them.
Girl A: ...?
Kyon: What's up now?
Girl A: ...Those headphones... where did you get them from?!
Kyon: ...Would you believe that they showed up on my pillow last night with a note saying “Happy Birthday”?
Girl A: Huh? It's nowhere near my birthday!
...I think you're misunderstanding something, but what's so big about the headphones?
Girl A: Those are definitely them... he was waving them around while I was trying to find Jupiter, ranting on about how cool his 'inscription' was... could I see those for a minute, please!?
Kyon: You're not making any sense.
Girl A: Just give me the damn things!
She makes a grab for them, but
Spark!
An arc of electricity jumps from the headphones to Girl A's hand.
Kyonko: Ow! What the hell!? What kind of static charge are you......?
Suddenly, I felfelt sicsicsick to my stostomach. Illlllllll. To the stostomachstomach.
The world is vibrating. This bench sounds very brown. Too brown. Too brown. Brown note. Bad color.
This isn't good.
Kyon is yelling something at me.
Kyonko: Hey, are you you you you okay? You look like you're gonna throw up your intestines. Are you gonna-- wreck everything we've been working for up until now! Why did you give him those stupid headphones!? I mean, sure, the results are pretty funny, but...
Now she's saying something else. Also, we're not on a park bench anymore. We're in a classroom.
Kyonko: The stuff you said, back in your introduction, was all that serious?
Sure it was. I believe in aliens. Time travelers. Espers. Sliders. Demons.
Especially in demons.
I feel lightheaded. It's the feeling of being in love.
I'm exploding. Critical existence failure.
Denied.
Not a classssssroom or a park bench, but a white world in between.
Mommy, is this where angels come from?
Kyonko: Really, now, what if SHE gets near them? Then what will happen? Do you know what will happen!?
Haruki: No, not really. But won't it be fun to find out?
Kyonko: He'll go into a state similar to the one you were in the time you ate those funky-looking mushrooms! ...And yeah, I guess it really would be fun to see how he'd behave, though.
Haruki: See? Aren't I a genius? Praise me some more, fearless leader. I find your praise delicious.
Kyonko: Nah, you're still gonna clean the whole house tomorrow as punishment.
Haruki: Guu... but that'll take hours...
I fall. Into the flashes of lightning without thunder.
I fall into memories corrupted by the world around me.
I lurvs my madness effects. Man, I haven't had the chance to do this in AGES.
Enjoy, kids.
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-19, 02:01
The hell kind of mushrooms are you on, Kaisos? That was stranger than usual. :heh:
edkedkedk
2010-01-19, 03:09
Girl A's Story
Girl A: ...! Don't you dare ask which one is mine!
Kyon: Well, it obviously isn't the purple one... it's much too big for you.
Win.
But yeah, this one is stranger than usual, I agree... :heh:
Dude I hope that sequence has some really cool colour wavy shit going on in the bg. :)
Dude I hope that sequence has some really cool colour wavy shit going on in the bg. :)
Thanks for making Heatth's job and mine a nightmare, Kaisos! :p
Kaisos Erranon
2010-01-19, 04:28
Dude I hope that sequence has some really cool colour wavy shit going on in the bg. :)
Yes, I certainly hope we can do something like that.
Thanks for making Heatth's job and mine a nightmare, Kaisos! :p
Sorry. I just write things that are awesome. Speaking of which.
Flashes in Space- Memories in Pieces (MYSELF)
FLASH
No more changing of the goddamn channel, no more blips from reality. Let's see this bloody charade through to the end.
FLASH
The girl sitting in front of me has turned around, talking to me with a smile on her face that I'd describe as 'vapid'.
Congratulations, nameless girl! You're the first Slut of the Year to try and ask Haruki Suzumiya out on a date!
But she hasn't gotten to that yet.
What was she saying...?
“The stuff you said, back in your introduction, was all that serious?”
...Right.
I make sure to put on my angry face before answering.
FLASH
Kyon: What stuff in my introduction?
Girl A: ...Eh? Your eyes... they're...
Kyon: Do YOU happen to be an alien?
Girl A: Okay, this is really, really creepy. Stop it, it's not funny.
Kyon: If you're not... then what business do you have with me?
Girl A: Stop... stop gripping my shoulder so hard! Let go!
I just grip her harder.
Kyon: You're a waste of time.
Let's move on to the next scene.
Kyon: Everything is. So. Boring! Why does this school not have any decently interesting clubs!?
Girl A: Okay, this is either a dream, or Itsuko bribed you to scare the crap out of me. Either way, could you stop, please? Please? I really don't want to hurt you, and believe me, I will!
I grip her other shoulder and dig in my nails. She kicks me in the leg, but I don't even care.
FLASH
"I thought after I graduated to senior high I would encounter some good clubs, but this, this is like trying to get into the Major Leagues but then discovering that the school you're attending doesn't even have a baseball team!" In other words, it sucks!
I look out the window, sighing deeply. Honestly, this school is crap... why did a person like her come here, of all places? It's for idiots like the girl sitting in front of me.
After a long while, she speaks up again. I brace myself for more things I don't want to hear, but...
"I think it can't be helped if there aren't any."
...Hah?
"Judging from our history, humans are usually satisfied with the way things are at the time. However, those who aren’t will try to invent or discover something to advance their civilization. Someone wanted to fly, so they invented airplanes. Someone wanted to travel easily, so cars and trains were made. Those things, however, were created by people who possessed special talents. Only a genius can convert their imaginings into reality. We ordinary people should just live out our ordinary lives in an ordinary fashion. It’s not our job to act on impulse just because we feel bored."
...Only a genius can convert their imaginings into reality...? That...
FLASH
Kyon: Silence!
Girl A: I'm quiet! I'm quiet! I'm being quiet! Now just. Get. Off. Me!
I have Kyon pinned down on top of the bench. I'm heavy enough so that she can't manoeuvre herself out of this position.
Too bad for her. ...Heh, I wonder how this'll look to passerby? If anyone sees this, my reputation is, like, totally ruined.
I giggle.
Moving on...
Kyon: Help me out.
Girl A: I'll help you out all right! Help you get to a mental hospital!
FLASH
I have my hands on her shoulders. She's blushing.
...This seriously isn't something to get embarrassed over, but whatever.
“Help with what?”
“Help me make my new club, of course!”
“Why do I have to help you make a new club!?”
FLASH
I had to cut that one short, since Kyon just kneed me in the balls while punching me in the face simultaneously.
...That actually hurt a little, so I had to roll off of her, off the bench, onto the cold, solid, cobalt-red ground.
I grab at something for support. It turned out to be a green dress, sealed with a prayer slip. It burns my hand. I scream.
Kyon: I'll need to secure a room, and find some members first, so you go grab the chartering paperwork.
Girl A: Okay, gotta just calm down and look at this logically... what the hell would make him go THIS nuts?!
Kyon: What does that matter? The important thing is to make the club first!
I try to grab her legs, but she just kicks me in the nose. Zero damage, but I'm blown back a bit.
Girl A: Humans are primarily rational creatures. There's a rational reason for everything... what caused him to lose it...? Gotta think, and think quickly...
Kyon: Understood? Find out what you have to do before school's out, and I'll go find a room! OK?!
I've managed to get to my feet, and am advancing on her once again.
Girl A: He first started to trip out when I touched those headphones... and then there was that spark... so maybe...
...We'd skip to the next scene here, but really, there isn't any more meaningful moments between these two until the end of the volume anyway. At least, not ones that we haven't covered already.
If you're at this point, you've probably seen them all, right? So there's no problem with skipping ahead through the boring parts... Unless, of course, you're playing the tech demo, in which case I have to both congratulate you for picking the Kyonko path first, and apologize for it being so confusing. It's just gonna get worse from here on out, though. ...Not really what you were expecting, huh?
FLASH
What good is sitting alone in my room?
...Today, I'm feeling an emotion I can't quite describe, since I honestly don't think I've really felt it before.
Ah, right. Rejection.
...Of course she'd prefer Yuuki. He's not the one who constantly badmouths her, mistreats her, and forces work upon her. I think he's actually better-looking than me, too.
...Of course she'd prefer Mitsuuru-kun. Hell, sometimes even I prefer Mitsuuru-kun.
Why would she ever, ever, go for me?
I feel terrible. I've said it before, and I'll say it again: Love is a mental illness.
Except that... it's not love I'm feeling right now, is it?
It's rejection, dejection, anger, and sadness. None of these things are love.
When I'm feeling love, it's like being on top of Mt. Everest. See, there's a similar feeling of breathlessness and dizziness, except that when you're on Everest that's due to lack of oxygen rather than hormones.
Love isn't bad at all. It's a great feeling. It's the best feeling of all.
And it's because I've lost any hope of it that I'm feeling so terrible right now.
...I had it backwards all along.
...But now what am I supposed to do!?
It was love at first sight, that's what it was. Why couldn't it have been mutual? Why does everything I try to do always go wrong?
WHY COULDN'T WE BOTH HAVE HAD LOVE?
Love. Love. Love. Love. Love. Love love. Love love love.
I hate that word. Hate it. Hate is the opposite of love. I never want to hear it again.
But it still echoes through my brain.
Lovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelo velovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelove lovelovelovelovelovelovelovelylovelovelovelovelove lovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelo velovehateloveloveloveloveloveloveloveloVELOVELOVE LOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVEDE STROYYLOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVE LOVELOVE!
<3
...
I'm destroying a city. But then I stop. It's pointless.
That was the day I met her, floating there, alone.
That was also the day I first felt love.
I will shape a world for her, so that then we can be happy together.
But then she chose someone else.
So I can never be happy.
It's pointless. I'll just reset everything, and try it over again.
I'll make her be mine, even if it takes one thousand years.
And it might.
FLASH
Girl A: Haaaaaaaaaaaah!
Right as I'm about to pounce... she jumps at me instead!?
Her feet hit me in the chest, knocking me back about five feet.
Girl A: This had better work!
I slowly realize that she'd managed to grab my headphones right before the impact.
No, not the headphones! I need those to live!
You little whore! Give those--
With a surprising show of strength, she breaks them in two.
I die.
...Dying hurts a lot.
FLASH
And always remember: LOVE LOVE THE QUEEN
FLASH
And then I wake up.
I stuck a Cabaret (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_D7AebhY4qg&feature=related) reference in there, by the way.
Please enjoy this and the previous scene. I hope to have finished the Kyonko path by tomorrow, but I make no promises.
Holy shit that was epic mushroom headphone induced euphoria.
What is this, I don't even.
Kaisos Erranon
2010-01-19, 04:48
What is this, I don't even.
Despite the fact that I love getting reactions like this, :heh: I'd like to encourage everyone to not stop thinking. There are interesting things in these scenes, hidden or otherwise, even amidst all the fun and noise.
Selofain
2010-01-19, 05:05
Flashes in Space- Memories in Pieces (MYSELF)
FLASH
No more changing of the goddamn channel, no more blips from reality. Let's see this bloody charade through to the end.
FLASH
The girl sitting in front of me has turned around, talking to me with a smile on her face that I'd describe as 'vapid'.
Congratulations, nameless girl! You're the first Slut of the Year to try and ask Haruki Suzumiya out on a date!
But she hasn't gotten to that yet.
What was she saying...?
“The stuff you said, back in your introduction, was all that serious?”
...Right.
I make sure to put on my angry face before answering.
FLASH
Kyon: What stuff in my introduction?
Girl A: ...Eh? Your eyes... they're...
Kyon: Do YOU happen to be an alien?
Girl A: Okay, this is really, really creepy. Stop it, it's not funny.
Kyon: If you're not... then what business do you have with me?
Girl A: Stop... stop gripping my shoulder so hard! Let go!
I just grip her harder.
Kyon: You're a waste of time.
Let's move on to the next scene.
Kyon: Everything is. So. Boring! Why does this school not have any decently interesting clubs!?
Girl A: Okay, this is either a dream, or Itsuko bribed you to scare the crap out of me. Either way, could you stop, please? Please? I really don't want to hurt you, and believe me, I will!
I grip her other shoulder and dig in my nails. She kicks me in the leg, but I don't even care.
FLASH
"I thought after I graduated to senior high I would encounter some good clubs, but this, this is like trying to get into the Major Leagues but then discovering that the school you're attending doesn't even have a baseball team!" In other words, it sucks!
I look out the window, sighing deeply. Honestly, this school is crap... why did a person like her come here, of all places? It's for idiots like the girl sitting in front of me.
After a long while, she speaks up again. I brace myself for more things I don't want to hear, but...
"I think it can't be helped if there aren't any."
...Hah?
"Judging from our history, humans are usually satisfied with the way things are at the time. However, those who aren’t will try to invent or discover something to advance their civilization. Someone wanted to fly, so they invented airplanes. Someone wanted to travel easily, so cars and trains were made. Those things, however, were created by people who possessed special talents. Only a genius can convert their imaginings into reality. We ordinary people should just live out our ordinary lives in an ordinary fashion. It’s not our job to act on impulse just because we feel bored."
...Only a genius can convert their imaginings into reality...? That...
FLASH
Kyon: Silence!
Girl A: I'm quiet! I'm quiet! I'm being quiet! Now just. Get. Off. Me!
I have Kyon pinned down on top of the bench. I'm heavy enough so that she can't manoeuvre herself out of this position.
Too bad for her. ...Heh, I wonder how this'll look to passerby? If anyone sees this, my reputation is, like, totally ruined.
I giggle.
Moving on...
Kyon: Help me out.
Girl A: I'll help you out all right! Help you get to a mental hospital!
FLASH
I have my hands on her shoulders. She's blushing.
...This seriously isn't something to get embarrassed over, but whatever.
“Help with what?”
“Help me make my new club, of course!”
“Why do I have to help you make a new club!?”
FLASH
I had to cut that one short, since Kyon just kneed me in the balls while punching me in the face simultaneously.
...That actually hurt a little, so I had to roll off of her, off the bench, onto the cold, solid, cobalt-red ground.
I grab at something for support. It turned out to be a green dress, sealed with a prayer slip. It burns my hand. I scream.
Kyon: I'll need to secure a room, and find some members first, so you go grab the chartering paperwork.
Girl A: Okay, gotta just calm down and look at this logically... what the hell would make him go THIS nuts?!
Kyon: What does that matter? The important thing is to make the club first!
I try to grab her legs, but she just kicks me in the nose. Zero damage, but I'm blown back a bit.
Girl A: Humans are primarily rational creatures. There's a rational reason for everything... what caused him to lose it...? Gotta think, and think quickly...
Kyon: Understood? Find out what you have to do before school's out, and I'll go find a room! OK?!
I've managed to get to my feet, and am advancing on her once again.
Girl A: He first started to trip out when I touched those headphones... and then there was that spark... so maybe...
...We'd skip to the next scene here, but really, there isn't any more meaningful moments between these two until the end of the volume anyway. At least, not ones that we haven't covered already.
If you're at this point, you've probably seen them all, right? So there's no problem with skipping ahead through the boring parts... Unless, of course, you're playing the tech demo, in which case I have to both congratulate you for picking the Kyonko path first, and apologize for it being so confusing. It's just gonna get worse from here on out, though. ...Not really what you were expecting, huh?
FLASH
What good is sitting alone in my room?
...Today, I'm feeling an emotion I can't quite describe, since I honestly don't think I've really felt it before.
Ah, right. Rejection.
...Of course she'd prefer Yuuki. He's not the one who constantly badmouths her, mistreats her, and forces work upon her. I think he's actually better-looking than me, too.
...Of course she'd prefer Mitsuuru-kun. Hell, sometimes even I prefer Mitsuuru-kun.
Why would she ever, ever, go for me?
I feel terrible. I've said it before, and I'll say it again: Love is a mental illness.
Except that... it's not love I'm feeling right now, is it?
It's rejection, dejection, anger, and sadness. None of these things are love.
When I'm feeling love, it's like being on top of Mt. Everest. See, there's a similar feeling of breathlessness and dizziness, except that when you're on Everest that's due to lack of oxygen rather than hormones.
Love isn't bad at all. It's a great feeling. It's the best feeling of all.
And it's because I've lost any hope of it that I'm feeling so terrible right now.
...I had it backwards all along.
...But now what am I supposed to do!?
It was love at first sight, that's what it was. Why couldn't it have been mutual? Why does everything I try to do always go wrong?
WHY COULDN'T WE BOTH HAVE HAD LOVE?
Love. Love. Love. Love. Love. Love love. Love love love.
I hate that word. Hate it. Hate is the opposite of love. I never want to hear it again.
But it still echoes through my brain.
Lovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelo velovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelove lovelovelovelovelovelovelovelylovelovelovelovelove lovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelo velovehateloveloveloveloveloveloveloveloVELOVELOVE LOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVEDE STROYYLOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVE LOVELOVE!
<3
...
I'm destroying a city. But then I stop. It's pointless.
That was the day I met her, floating there, alone.
That was also the day I first felt love.
I will shape a world for her, so that then we can be happy together.
But then she chose someone else.
So I can never be happy.
It's pointless. I'll just reset everything, and try it over again.
I'll make her be mine, even if it takes one thousand years.
And it might.
FLASH
Girl A: Haaaaaaaaaaaah!
Right as I'm about to pounce... she jumps at me instead!?
Her feet hit me in the chest, knocking me back about five feet.
Girl A: This had better work!
I slowly realize that she'd managed to grab my headphones right before the impact.
No, not the headphones! I need those to live!
You little whore! Give those--
With a surprising show of strength, she breaks them in two.
I die.
...Dying hurts a lot.
FLASH
And always remember: LOVE LOVE THE QUEEN
FLASH
And then I wake up.
Trippy. I'm trying to visualize what Kyonko must have been seeing, and...yeah, trippy. I think I spy shinjin, but not really. Kinda sorta?
/de-lurk
Flashes in Space- Memories in Pieces (MYSELF)
FLASH
No more changing of the goddamn channel, no more blips from reality. Let's see this bloody charade through to the end.
FLASH
The girl sitting in front of me has turned around, talking to me with a smile on her face that I'd describe as 'vapid'.
Congratulations, nameless girl! You're the first Slut of the Year to try and ask Haruki Suzumiya out on a date!
But she hasn't gotten to that yet.
What was she saying...?
“The stuff you said, back in your introduction, was all that serious?”
...Right.
I make sure to put on my angry face before answering.
FLASH
Kyon: What stuff in my introduction?
Girl A: ...Eh? Your eyes... they're...
Kyon: Do YOU happen to be an alien?
Girl A: Okay, this is really, really creepy. Stop it, it's not funny.
Kyon: If you're not... then what business do you have with me?
Girl A: Stop... stop gripping my shoulder so hard! Let go!
I just grip her harder.
Kyon: You're a waste of time.
Let's move on to the next scene.
Kyon: Everything is. So. Boring! Why does this school not have any decently interesting clubs!?
Girl A: Okay, this is either a dream, or Itsuko bribed you to scare the crap out of me. Either way, could you stop, please? Please? I really don't want to hurt you, and believe me, I will!
I grip her other shoulder and dig in my nails. She kicks me in the leg, but I don't even care.
FLASH
"I thought after I graduated to senior high I would encounter some good clubs, but this, this is like trying to get into the Major Leagues but then discovering that the school you're attending doesn't even have a baseball team!" In other words, it sucks!
I look out the window, sighing deeply. Honestly, this school is crap... why did a person like her come here, of all places? It's for idiots like the girl sitting in front of me.
After a long while, she speaks up again. I brace myself for more things I don't want to hear, but...
"I think it can't be helped if there aren't any."
...Hah?
"Judging from our history, humans are usually satisfied with the way things are at the time. However, those who aren’t will try to invent or discover something to advance their civilization. Someone wanted to fly, so they invented airplanes. Someone wanted to travel easily, so cars and trains were made. Those things, however, were created by people who possessed special talents. Only a genius can convert their imaginings into reality. We ordinary people should just live out our ordinary lives in an ordinary fashion. It’s not our job to act on impulse just because we feel bored."
...Only a genius can convert their imaginings into reality...? That...
FLASH
Kyon: Silence!
Girl A: I'm quiet! I'm quiet! I'm being quiet! Now just. Get. Off. Me!
I have Kyon pinned down on top of the bench. I'm heavy enough so that she can't manoeuvre herself out of this position.
Too bad for her. ...Heh, I wonder how this'll look to passerby? If anyone sees this, my reputation is, like, totally ruined.
I giggle.
Moving on...
Kyon: Help me out.
Girl A: I'll help you out all right! Help you get to a mental hospital!
FLASH
I have my hands on her shoulders. She's blushing.
...This seriously isn't something to get embarrassed over, but whatever.
“Help with what?”
“Help me make my new club, of course!”
“Why do I have to help you make a new club!?”
FLASH
I had to cut that one short, since Kyon just kneed me in the balls while punching me in the face simultaneously.
...That actually hurt a little, so I had to roll off of her, off the bench, onto the cold, solid, cobalt-red ground.
I grab at something for support. It turned out to be a green dress, sealed with a prayer slip. It burns my hand. I scream.
Kyon: I'll need to secure a room, and find some members first, so you go grab the chartering paperwork.
Girl A: Okay, gotta just calm down and look at this logically... what the hell would make him go THIS nuts?!
Kyon: What does that matter? The important thing is to make the club first!
I try to grab her legs, but she just kicks me in the nose. Zero damage, but I'm blown back a bit.
Girl A: Humans are primarily rational creatures. There's a rational reason for everything... what caused him to lose it...? Gotta think, and think quickly...
Kyon: Understood? Find out what you have to do before school's out, and I'll go find a room! OK?!
I've managed to get to my feet, and am advancing on her once again.
Girl A: He first started to trip out when I touched those headphones... and then there was that spark... so maybe...
...We'd skip to the next scene here, but really, there isn't any more meaningful moments between these two until the end of the volume anyway. At least, not ones that we haven't covered already.
If you're at this point, you've probably seen them all, right? So there's no problem with skipping ahead through the boring parts... Unless, of course, you're playing the tech demo, in which case I have to both congratulate you for picking the Kyonko path first, and apologize for it being so confusing. It's just gonna get worse from here on out, though. ...Not really what you were expecting, huh?
FLASH
What good is sitting alone in my room?
...Today, I'm feeling an emotion I can't quite describe, since I honestly don't think I've really felt it before.
Ah, right. Rejection.
...Of course she'd prefer Yuuki. He's not the one who constantly badmouths her, mistreats her, and forces work upon her. I think he's actually better-looking than me, too.
...Of course she'd prefer Mitsuuru-kun. Hell, sometimes even I prefer Mitsuuru-kun.
Why would she ever, ever, go for me?
I feel terrible. I've said it before, and I'll say it again: Love is a mental illness.
Except that... it's not love I'm feeling right now, is it?
It's rejection, dejection, anger, and sadness. None of these things are love.
When I'm feeling love, it's like being on top of Mt. Everest. See, there's a similar feeling of breathlessness and dizziness, except that when you're on Everest that's due to lack of oxygen rather than hormones.
Love isn't bad at all. It's a great feeling. It's the best feeling of all.
And it's because I've lost any hope of it that I'm feeling so terrible right now.
...I had it backwards all along.
...But now what am I supposed to do!?
It was love at first sight, that's what it was. Why couldn't it have been mutual? Why does everything I try to do always go wrong?
WHY COULDN'T WE BOTH HAVE HAD LOVE?
Love. Love. Love. Love. Love. Love love. Love love love.
I hate that word. Hate it. Hate is the opposite of love. I never want to hear it again.
But it still echoes through my brain.
Lovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelo velovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelove lovelovelovelovelovelovelovelylovelovelovelovelove lovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelo velovehateloveloveloveloveloveloveloveloVELOVELOVE LOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVEDE STROYYLOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVE LOVELOVE!
<3
...
I'm destroying a city. But then I stop. It's pointless.
That was the day I met her, floating there, alone.
That was also the day I first felt love.
I will shape a world for her, so that then we can be happy together.
But then she chose someone else.
So I can never be happy.
It's pointless. I'll just reset everything, and try it over again.
I'll make her be mine, even if it takes one thousand years.
And it might.
FLASH
Girl A: Haaaaaaaaaaaah!
Right as I'm about to pounce... she jumps at me instead!?
Her feet hit me in the chest, knocking me back about five feet.
Girl A: This had better work!
I slowly realize that she'd managed to grab my headphones right before the impact.
No, not the headphones! I need those to live!
You little whore! Give those--
With a surprising show of strength, she breaks them in two.
I die.
...Dying hurts a lot.
FLASH
And always remember: LOVE LOVE THE QUEEN
FLASH
And then I wake up.
This, was awesome! Epic! Nice job, Kaisos, really, a really good job!!
Sooo, Haruki is kinda possessing Kyon trough the headphones eh? This is really cool. :p Anyway, I believe the same don't quite happened in the other scenes right? I mean, Mikuru would probably mention if Kyon was assalting her while sleeping. :heh: And Haruhi would say something as well. I guess that the effect was stronger because it was Kyonko.
The only negative point is there is less scenes then the other. But, oh, not important at all.
Trippy. I'm trying to visualize what Kyonko must have been seeing, and...yeah, trippy. I think I spy shinjin, but not really. Kinda sorta?
According to the story overview or something I saw from Heatth's archive, Kyon is having fits, like he's having a heart attack or sumthing. And where does Kyonko get all her hidden strength? Snapping headphones into two halves? Plus, is this Haruki or Kyon narrating?
Stay tuned for the final episode of ER.... I mean, the final Kyonko scene for Day 5...or not.
PS Screw my "vacation" I'm too hooked to seitenkan. :p
Stormwhite
2010-01-19, 06:35
What the...
On a "thinking" note, does the real Haruki come into the normal universe at the end of this? Or is it Kyon waking up?
Plus, is this Haruki or Kyon narrating?
Both? :p
Anyway, I wouldn't say it is look like a heart attack. The outlines say "some kind of attack". I believe he is playacting as Haruki, but his eyes are aout of focus (Kyonko mentioned his eyes were creepy). If you notice, most scenes he is 'remembering' involve Haruki grabing Kyonko somehow.
If you notice, most scenes he is 'remembering' involve Haruki grabing Kyonko somehow.
Now that just sounds wrong...
Now that just sounds wrong...
but delicious~.
Nyahahahaha.
Nanao-kun
2010-01-19, 09:24
Yes, I certainly hope we can do something like that.
Sorry. I just write things that are awesome. Speaking of which.
Flashes in Space- Memories in Pieces (MYSELF)
FLASH
No more changing of the goddamn channel, no more blips from reality. Let's see this bloody charade through to the end.
FLASH
The girl sitting in front of me has turned around, talking to me with a smile on her face that I'd describe as 'vapid'.
Congratulations, nameless girl! You're the first Slut of the Year to try and ask Haruki Suzumiya out on a date!
But she hasn't gotten to that yet.
What was she saying...?
“The stuff you said, back in your introduction, was all that serious?”
...Right.
I make sure to put on my angry face before answering.
FLASH
Kyon: What stuff in my introduction?
Girl A: ...Eh? Your eyes... they're...
Kyon: Do YOU happen to be an alien?
Girl A: Okay, this is really, really creepy. Stop it, it's not funny.
Kyon: If you're not... then what business do you have with me?
Girl A: Stop... stop gripping my shoulder so hard! Let go!
I just grip her harder.
Kyon: You're a waste of time.
Let's move on to the next scene.
Kyon: Everything is. So. Boring! Why does this school not have any decently interesting clubs!?
Girl A: Okay, this is either a dream, or Itsuko bribed you to scare the crap out of me. Either way, could you stop, please? Please? I really don't want to hurt you, and believe me, I will!
I grip her other shoulder and dig in my nails. She kicks me in the leg, but I don't even care.
FLASH
"I thought after I graduated to senior high I would encounter some good clubs, but this, this is like trying to get into the Major Leagues but then discovering that the school you're attending doesn't even have a baseball team!" In other words, it sucks!
I look out the window, sighing deeply. Honestly, this school is crap... why did a person like her come here, of all places? It's for idiots like the girl sitting in front of me.
After a long while, she speaks up again. I brace myself for more things I don't want to hear, but...
"I think it can't be helped if there aren't any."
...Hah?
"Judging from our history, humans are usually satisfied with the way things are at the time. However, those who aren’t will try to invent or discover something to advance their civilization. Someone wanted to fly, so they invented airplanes. Someone wanted to travel easily, so cars and trains were made. Those things, however, were created by people who possessed special talents. Only a genius can convert their imaginings into reality. We ordinary people should just live out our ordinary lives in an ordinary fashion. It’s not our job to act on impulse just because we feel bored."
...Only a genius can convert their imaginings into reality...? That...
FLASH
Kyon: Silence!
Girl A: I'm quiet! I'm quiet! I'm being quiet! Now just. Get. Off. Me!
I have Kyon pinned down on top of the bench. I'm heavy enough so that she can't manoeuvre herself out of this position.
Too bad for her. ...Heh, I wonder how this'll look to passerby? If anyone sees this, my reputation is, like, totally ruined.
I giggle.
Moving on...
Kyon: Help me out.
Girl A: I'll help you out all right! Help you get to a mental hospital!
FLASH
I have my hands on her shoulders. She's blushing.
...This seriously isn't something to get embarrassed over, but whatever.
“Help with what?”
“Help me make my new club, of course!”
“Why do I have to help you make a new club!?”
FLASH
I had to cut that one short, since Kyon just kneed me in the balls while punching me in the face simultaneously.
...That actually hurt a little, so I had to roll off of her, off the bench, onto the cold, solid, cobalt-red ground.
I grab at something for support. It turned out to be a green dress, sealed with a prayer slip. It burns my hand. I scream.
Kyon: I'll need to secure a room, and find some members first, so you go grab the chartering paperwork.
Girl A: Okay, gotta just calm down and look at this logically... what the hell would make him go THIS nuts?!
Kyon: What does that matter? The important thing is to make the club first!
I try to grab her legs, but she just kicks me in the nose. Zero damage, but I'm blown back a bit.
Girl A: Humans are primarily rational creatures. There's a rational reason for everything... what caused him to lose it...? Gotta think, and think quickly...
Kyon: Understood? Find out what you have to do before school's out, and I'll go find a room! OK?!
I've managed to get to my feet, and am advancing on her once again.
Girl A: He first started to trip out when I touched those headphones... and then there was that spark... so maybe...
...We'd skip to the next scene here, but really, there isn't any more meaningful moments between these two until the end of the volume anyway. At least, not ones that we haven't covered already.
If you're at this point, you've probably seen them all, right? So there's no problem with skipping ahead through the boring parts... Unless, of course, you're playing the tech demo, in which case I have to both congratulate you for picking the Kyonko path first, and apologize for it being so confusing. It's just gonna get worse from here on out, though. ...Not really what you were expecting, huh?
FLASH
What good is sitting alone in my room?
...Today, I'm feeling an emotion I can't quite describe, since I honestly don't think I've really felt it before.
Ah, right. Rejection.
...Of course she'd prefer Yuuki. He's not the one who constantly badmouths her, mistreats her, and forces work upon her. I think he's actually better-looking than me, too.
...Of course she'd prefer Mitsuuru-kun. Hell, sometimes even I prefer Mitsuuru-kun.
Why would she ever, ever, go for me?
I feel terrible. I've said it before, and I'll say it again: Love is a mental illness.
Except that... it's not love I'm feeling right now, is it?
It's rejection, dejection, anger, and sadness. None of these things are love.
When I'm feeling love, it's like being on top of Mt. Everest. See, there's a similar feeling of breathlessness and dizziness, except that when you're on Everest that's due to lack of oxygen rather than hormones.
Love isn't bad at all. It's a great feeling. It's the best feeling of all.
And it's because I've lost any hope of it that I'm feeling so terrible right now.
...I had it backwards all along.
...But now what am I supposed to do!?
It was love at first sight, that's what it was. Why couldn't it have been mutual? Why does everything I try to do always go wrong?
WHY COULDN'T WE BOTH HAVE HAD LOVE?
Love. Love. Love. Love. Love. Love love. Love love love.
I hate that word. Hate it. Hate is the opposite of love. I never want to hear it again.
But it still echoes through my brain.
Lovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelo velovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelove lovelovelovelovelovelovelovelylovelovelovelovelove lovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelo velovehateloveloveloveloveloveloveloveloVELOVELOVE LOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVEDE STROYYLOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVE LOVELOVE!
<3
...
I'm destroying a city. But then I stop. It's pointless.
That was the day I met her, floating there, alone.
That was also the day I first felt love.
I will shape a world for her, so that then we can be happy together.
But then she chose someone else.
So I can never be happy.
It's pointless. I'll just reset everything, and try it over again.
I'll make her be mine, even if it takes one thousand years.
And it might.
FLASH
Girl A: Haaaaaaaaaaaah!
Right as I'm about to pounce... she jumps at me instead!?
Her feet hit me in the chest, knocking me back about five feet.
Girl A: This had better work!
I slowly realize that she'd managed to grab my headphones right before the impact.
No, not the headphones! I need those to live!
You little whore! Give those--
With a surprising show of strength, she breaks them in two.
I die.
...Dying hurts a lot.
FLASH
And always remember: LOVE LOVE THE QUEEN
FLASH
And then I wake up.
I stuck a Cabaret (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_D7AebhY4qg&feature=related) reference in there, by the way.
Please enjoy this and the previous scene. I hope to have finished the Kyonko path by tomorrow, but I make no promises.
So Haruki possessed Kyon? I hadn't really expected that. On another note, this must be what it's like to be high.
So Haruki possessed Kyon? I hadn't really expected that. On another note, this must be what it's like to be high.
This is to being high what skydiving is to jumping off the curb.
Anyways, great scene. Took me a second to grasp the duality of what was going on, but that's the point.
Off to the first day of classes... huzzah?
spawnofthejudge
2010-01-19, 10:42
The giant LESS THAN THREE made me giggle.
This is my favorite of these sequences so far, Kaisos.
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-19, 11:28
...We'd skip to the next scene here, but really, there isn't any more meaningful moments between these two until the end of the volume anyway. At least, not ones that we haven't covered already.
If you're at this point, you've probably seen them all, right? So there's no problem with skipping ahead through the boring parts... Unless, of course, you're playing the tech demo, in which case I have to both congratulate you for picking the Kyonko path first, and apologize for it being so confusing. It's just gonna get worse from here on out, though. ...Not really what you were expecting, huh?
More than enough incentive to go for this one. :p
Kaisos Erranon
2010-01-19, 14:14
You know, seeing some theorizing would be awesome and self-inflating. :heh:
This, was awesome! Epic! Nice job, Kaisos, really, a really good job!!
Really? I expected more complaints from you.
The only negative point is there is less scenes then the other. But, oh, not important at all.
The Kyonko route is unlocked last, and furthermore, the end of Melancholy is a more traditional flashback that will show up later.
And where does Kyonko get all her hidden strength? Snapping headphones into two halves? Plus, is this Haruki or Kyon narrating?
Kyonko's actually pretty strong, and more so under duress... remember how Kyon threw that chair at Ryoko? Something like that.
And who says it has to be one or the other?
Stay tuned for the final episode of ER.... I mean, the final Kyonko scene for Day 5...or not.
Actually, there's several more, although I guess those are technically part of her route.
Anyway, I wouldn't say it is look like a heart attack. The outlines say "some kind of attack". I believe he is playacting as Haruki, but his eyes are aout of focus (Kyonko mentioned his eyes were creepy). If you notice, most scenes he is 'remembering' involve Haruki grabing Kyonko somehow.
Indeed, which is why Kyon is trying to rape her.
In other words, LOVE.
The giant LESS THAN THREE made me giggle.
This is my favorite of these sequences so far, Kaisos.
Thanks, but it's supposed to be a giant green heart, not "less than three". >_>
spawnofthejudge
2010-01-19, 14:50
Thanks, but it's supposed to be a giant green heart, not "less than three". >_>I know, but the bigger <3 is, the less it looks like a heart.
If it's to be a giant heart character/picture, that makes more sense, but isn't nearly as funny.
Thanks, but it's supposed to be a giant green heart, not "less than three". >_>
You should do one of these then:
♥
Kaisos Erranon
2010-01-19, 16:04
You should do one of these then:
♥
Not as huge as I want it to be, and it'd be a background in any case.
edkedkedk
2010-01-19, 16:18
Hmmm... I wonder if the color stands for something... :eyebrow:
The Kyonko path gets more and more mind-boggling, it's amazing. I would love to dissect it further but frankly, I don't know where to start :eyespin:
CrowKenobi
2010-01-19, 17:21
Very trippy... in a good way, of course! :p :D
I wonder if the text that Kogetsu quoted was green would make it even more trippy... :heh:
With all that "love love love" going on, I'm surprised that you didn't have him breaking out in a Beatles tune (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NzJ2NKp23WU&NR=1). :p
luap1138
2010-01-19, 17:48
I've been thinking this for a while now, and that last scene pretty much confirmed it for me:
The phrase "What is true for one is true for the other" means much more for the Kyons and the Suzumiyas than it does for any of the other characters. For in their case, what is true for Kyon, is true for Kyonko, is true for Haruhi, is true for Haruki, is true for Kyon.
In other words, instead of just a pair, its a Square. :cool:
dragon4dudes
2010-01-19, 17:50
I feel tripped out and slightly confused. But of course that's what I'm supposed to be feeling, right?
"Love, love. Love is all you need." That'd be pretty interesting.
Really? I expected more complaints from you.
Really? You don't see me complaning much about the non sense scenes. How would I, anyway? It don't have any sesne nor is meant to have. :heh:
The Kyonko route is unlocked last, and furthermore, the end of Melancholy is a more traditional flashback that will show up later.
Ah. Awasome.
Kyonko's actually pretty strong, and more so under duress... remember how Kyon threw that chair at Ryoko? Something like that.
I have forgot that scene. :heh: Btw, was it on the novel? Or just the anime? I don't remember.
Indeed, which is why Kyon is trying to rape her.
In other words, LOVE.
Huh? (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/RapeIsLove)
You should do one of these then:
♥
[/B]Not as huge as I want it to be, and it'd be a background in any case.
But, just to be sure, the ♥ is suppose to appear every time you put a <3 right?
(How do you tipe it, anyway? I can just copy and past it)
Kogetsu Shirogane
2010-01-19, 17:55
Btw, was it on the novel? Or just the anime? I don't remember.
It was always there. Except for maybe the manga, I'm not really sure there. Let's try not to derail the thread over it, though. :heh:
Kaisos Erranon
2010-01-19, 18:00
Hmmm... I wonder if the color stands for something... :eyebrow:
READ THE PREVIOUS SCENES. Lady Green (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2660572&postcount=20000) has been around for a while.
In other words, instead of just a pair, its a Square. :cool:
...
Well, of all the things I would have expected anyone to understand at this point, I would not have expected this. Good job.
I feel tripped out and slightly confused. But of course that's what I'm supposed to be feeling, right?
Such is a mindfuck.
Really? You don't see me complaning much about the non sense scenes. How would I, anyway? It don't have any sesne nor is meant to have. :heh:
Utterly wrong. There's a lot of hints towards future plotlines, especially in that last scene.
Don't stop thinking.
I have forgot that scene. :heh: Btw, was it on the novel? Or just the anime? I don't remember.
Both.
I decided to take a risk and threw a chair at Asakura, yet the chair turned in the air right in front of Asakura, and flew off to the other end of the room. How can this be possible!?
He says it like it's nothing. :heh:
But, just to be sure, the ♥ is suppose to appear every time you put a <3 right?
Yup. I don't know how you'd type it in a browser, though.
dragon4dudes
2010-01-19, 18:05
Huh. When you say mindfuck, I am reminded of Green Day's "American Idiot". Hey, the color green appears.
luap1138
2010-01-19, 18:16
...
Well, of all the things I would have expected anyone to understand at this point, I would not have expected this. Good job.
Thanks. :)
Utterly wrong. There's a lot of hints towards future plotlines, especially in that last scene.
You mean the "Love" scene? Hoo boy. That does not bode well for Kyon. :heh:
By the way, who's supposed to be the main antagonist for Cooperation Route, since it can't be Kyon (or can it :twitch:)? Or is there even any?
Kaisos Erranon
2010-01-19, 18:19
You mean the "Love" scene? Hoo boy. That does not bode well for Kyon. :heh:
Hmm. Well, you'll understand eventually.
By the way, who's supposed to be the main antagonist for Cooperation Route, since it can't be Kyon (or can it :twitch:)? Or is there even any?
Kyon is not the main antagonist for CoOp. It doesn't have a "real" main antagonist, since it's largely about the brigades as a whole, not just Kyon/Kyonko.
This, of course, doesn't preclude him from being the main antagonist in some other route.
I've been thinking this for a while now, and that last scene pretty much confirmed it for me:
The phrase "What is true for one is true for the other" means much more for the Kyons and the Suzumiyas than it does for any of the other characters. For in their case, what is true for Kyon, is true for Kyonko, is true for Haruhi, is true for Haruki, is true for Kyon.
In other words, instead of just a pair, its a Square. :cool:
I believe it is one of the themes of this story. Kyon and Haruhi are, after all, very similar, despite apparing to be oposite. This is clear in the novel, specially after Vol. 4 and 9. Because of that, in the end Kyonko and Haruki also ends up being weid alternate version of Haruhi and Kyon respectively.
Btw, while I could see similarity between Kyonko and Haruhi, I've neverseen between the men. Until anime version of Endless Eight. I laught a lot bat then. It is more amusing that the scenes is the same in the novel, but Kyon was denying (he said he was definitively not yelling. :p).
Well, of all the things I would have expected anyone to understand at this point, I would not have expected this. Good job.
Really? You are repeating Kyon-chan and Haruki are meant to be silimilar to Haruhi and Kyon, respectively, since the begining. I am ashamed I haven't picked the square thing.
Utterly wrong. There's a lot of hints towards future plotlines, especially in that last scene.
Don't stop thinking.
Ah, don't get me wrong. I meat itis impossible nitpick somethig because it is all meant to be crazy. There is no 'OOC' and no 'inconsistency' in scenes like that, so I can't 'complain'.
Yup. I don't know how you'd type it in a browser, though.
I see. Well, I ca copy and past it to the code, so there is no problem. I was just curious.
Thanks, but it's supposed to be a giant green heart, not "less than three". >_>
Less than three, beyond being the way to draw a heart in Ascii, has become a common way of vocally expressing the same thing (hence the song "Less Than Three" by Becky (http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/344532) (warning, it's not quiet, even before you start the actual video)).
Anyways... rape is love... hmm... this'll be... umm... interesting. Yes, interesting is the word I'll use here.
edkedkedk
2010-01-19, 21:46
READ THE PREVIOUS SCENES. Lady Green (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2660572&postcount=20000) has been around for a while.
Actually I have already read them, and even viewed that image. I'm just thinking about alternate meanings for the color, that's all. Sorry if I didn't catch on fast enough.
Kaisos Erranon
2010-01-19, 21:49
Actually I have already read them, and even viewed that image. I'm just thinking about alternate meanings for the color, that's all. Sorry if I didn't catch on fast enough.
Ah. :heh:
Well, green is the color of jealousy, if that helps.
Less than three, beyond being the way to draw a heart in Ascii, has become a common way of vocally expressing the same thing.
Hmm. I didn't know that. Thank you.
Ah, don't get me wrong. I meat itis impossible nitpick somethig because it is all meant to be crazy. There is no 'OOC' and no 'inconsistency' in scenes like that, so I can't 'complain'.
That's just what I'm saying, man. It's not all meant to be crazy.
That's just what I'm saying, man. It's not all meant to be crazy.
Hmm? The entire scene is Kyon hallucinating and assalting Kyonko, and you say it is not crazy?
I know that, in a way, it is not as crazy as the others Flashes in Space scenes, as half of it is actually happening. What I am saying, however, is that normal logic do not apply there.
I mean, what could I say? That is OOC Kyon assalt Kyonko? I may argue that not even Haruki would actually do that, so Kyon shouldn't since he is possessed by him. But that don't really seen right. It is not like Kyon have become Haruki, he is not really talking like him or thinking like him. It is more like a weird extrame parody of Haruki. On drugs.
So, if normal logic do not apply, I can not tell what is 'wrong', 'irreal' or, obviously, 'unlogic'. I can only read and try to understand it.
PP:
In a side not, while looking in wikipedia for other meanings of 'green', I discovered japanese didn't had a word for green in the past. They used 'ao' (blue) insted the current 'midori' (green). For exemple, 'fresh leaves' is 'aoba', litterally 'blue leaves' (of course it meant to be 'green leaves'). Interesting huh?
PPP:
Other meanings of green apparently include: resurrection and immortality in Ancient Egypt; love and lust in medieval period; prospery in where money is green (like, you know, US) and, the most interesting witchcraft and other evil things (decay, toxicity, etc) in early English folklore.
Kaisos Erranon
2010-01-19, 22:23
Other meanings of green apparently include: resurrection and immortality in Ancient Egypt; love and lust in medieval period; prospery in where money is green (like, you know, US) and, the most interesting witchcraft and other evil things (decay, toxicity, etc) in early English folklore.
I love how fitting a random color choice ends up being. :heh:
I love how fitting a random color choice ends up being. :heh:
Isn't it? :p
I missed some important meanings, btw. Apparently in heraldry green (vert) is a symbol of "jolliness and youth, but also of beauty and shame" (lol :heh:) and 'death'.
It is also the symbolic color of environmentalism (not that I need to tell you, of course).
dragon4dudes
2010-01-19, 22:44
The technical term for what green represents is envy.... Its also the wavelength of color that chlorophyll absorbs the least (or reflects most), hence green plants.
SgtHydra
2010-01-19, 23:06
PPP:
Other meanings of green apparently include: resurrection and immortality in Ancient Egypt; love and lust in medieval period; prospery in where money is green (like, you know, US) and, the most interesting witchcraft and other evil things (decay, toxicity, etc) in early English folklore.
Don't forget the obvious connection to the nature.
Green is a colour for all seasons, really...
But, in my opinon, what we have here is little more than a Green Eyed Monster.
dragon4dudes
2010-01-19, 23:34
Referencing Green and Monster reminds me of the Boston Red Sox....
So uh, what were we talking about?
you guys... are still alive!?
Yes, I certainly hope we can do something like that.
Sorry. I just write things that are awesome. Speaking of which.
Flashes in Space- Memories in Pieces (MYSELF)
FLASH
No more changing of the goddamn channel, no more blips from reality. Let's see this bloody charade through to the end.
FLASH
The girl sitting in front of me has turned around, talking to me with a smile on her face that I'd describe as 'vapid'.
Congratulations, nameless girl! You're the first Slut of the Year to try and ask Haruki Suzumiya out on a date!
But she hasn't gotten to that yet.
What was she saying...?
“The stuff you said, back in your introduction, was all that serious?”
...Right.
I make sure to put on my angry face before answering.
FLASH
Kyon: What stuff in my introduction?
Girl A: ...Eh? Your eyes... they're...
Kyon: Do YOU happen to be an alien?
Girl A: Okay, this is really, really creepy. Stop it, it's not funny.
Kyon: If you're not... then what business do you have with me?
Girl A: Stop... stop gripping my shoulder so hard! Let go!
I just grip her harder.
Kyon: You're a waste of time.
Let's move on to the next scene.
Kyon: Everything is. So. Boring! Why does this school not have any decently interesting clubs!?
Girl A: Okay, this is either a dream, or Itsuko bribed you to scare the crap out of me. Either way, could you stop, please? Please? I really don't want to hurt you, and believe me, I will!
I grip her other shoulder and dig in my nails. She kicks me in the leg, but I don't even care.
FLASH
"I thought after I graduated to senior high I would encounter some good clubs, but this, this is like trying to get into the Major Leagues but then discovering that the school you're attending doesn't even have a baseball team!" In other words, it sucks!
I look out the window, sighing deeply. Honestly, this school is crap... why did a person like her come here, of all places? It's for idiots like the girl sitting in front of me.
After a long while, she speaks up again. I brace myself for more things I don't want to hear, but...
"I think it can't be helped if there aren't any."
...Hah?
"Judging from our history, humans are usually satisfied with the way things are at the time. However, those who aren’t will try to invent or discover something to advance their civilization. Someone wanted to fly, so they invented airplanes. Someone wanted to travel easily, so cars and trains were made. Those things, however, were created by people who possessed special talents. Only a genius can convert their imaginings into reality. We ordinary people should just live out our ordinary lives in an ordinary fashion. It’s not our job to act on impulse just because we feel bored."
...Only a genius can convert their imaginings into reality...? That...
FLASH
Kyon: Silence!
Girl A: I'm quiet! I'm quiet! I'm being quiet! Now just. Get. Off. Me!
I have Kyon pinned down on top of the bench. I'm heavy enough so that she can't manoeuvre herself out of this position.
Too bad for her. ...Heh, I wonder how this'll look to passerby? If anyone sees this, my reputation is, like, totally ruined.
I giggle.
Moving on...
Kyon: Help me out.
Girl A: I'll help you out all right! Help you get to a mental hospital!
FLASH
I have my hands on her shoulders. She's blushing.
...This seriously isn't something to get embarrassed over, but whatever.
“Help with what?”
“Help me make my new club, of course!”
“Why do I have to help you make a new club!?”
FLASH
I had to cut that one short, since Kyon just kneed me in the balls while punching me in the face simultaneously.
...That actually hurt a little, so I had to roll off of her, off the bench, onto the cold, solid, cobalt-red ground.
I grab at something for support. It turned out to be a green dress, sealed with a prayer slip. It burns my hand. I scream.
Kyon: I'll need to secure a room, and find some members first, so you go grab the chartering paperwork.
Girl A: Okay, gotta just calm down and look at this logically... what the hell would make him go THIS nuts?!
Kyon: What does that matter? The important thing is to make the club first!
I try to grab her legs, but she just kicks me in the nose. Zero damage, but I'm blown back a bit.
Girl A: Humans are primarily rational creatures. There's a rational reason for everything... what caused him to lose it...? Gotta think, and think quickly...
Kyon: Understood? Find out what you have to do before school's out, and I'll go find a room! OK?!
I've managed to get to my feet, and am advancing on her once again.
Girl A: He first started to trip out when I touched those headphones... and then there was that spark... so maybe...
...We'd skip to the next scene here, but really, there isn't any more meaningful moments between these two until the end of the volume anyway. At least, not ones that we haven't covered already.
If you're at this point, you've probably seen them all, right? So there's no problem with skipping ahead through the boring parts... Unless, of course, you're playing the tech demo, in which case I have to both congratulate you for picking the Kyonko path first, and apologize for it being so confusing. It's just gonna get worse from here on out, though. ...Not really what you were expecting, huh?
FLASH
What good is sitting alone in my room?
...Today, I'm feeling an emotion I can't quite describe, since I honestly don't think I've really felt it before.
Ah, right. Rejection.
...Of course she'd prefer Yuuki. He's not the one who constantly badmouths her, mistreats her, and forces work upon her. I think he's actually better-looking than me, too.
...Of course she'd prefer Mitsuuru-kun. Hell, sometimes even I prefer Mitsuuru-kun.
Why would she ever, ever, go for me?
I feel terrible. I've said it before, and I'll say it again: Love is a mental illness.
Except that... it's not love I'm feeling right now, is it?
It's rejection, dejection, anger, and sadness. None of these things are love.
When I'm feeling love, it's like being on top of Mt. Everest. See, there's a similar feeling of breathlessness and dizziness, except that when you're on Everest that's due to lack of oxygen rather than hormones.
Love isn't bad at all. It's a great feeling. It's the best feeling of all.
And it's because I've lost any hope of it that I'm feeling so terrible right now.
...I had it backwards all along.
...But now what am I supposed to do!?
It was love at first sight, that's what it was. Why couldn't it have been mutual? Why does everything I try to do always go wrong?
WHY COULDN'T WE BOTH HAVE HAD LOVE?
Love. Love. Love. Love. Love. Love love. Love love love.
I hate that word. Hate it. Hate is the opposite of love. I never want to hear it again.
But it still echoes through my brain.
Lovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelo velovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelove lovelovelovelovelovelovelovelylovelovelovelovelove lovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelovelo velovehateloveloveloveloveloveloveloveloVELOVELOVE LOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVEDE STROYYLOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVE LOVELOVE!
<3
...
I'm destroying a city. But then I stop. It's pointless.
That was the day I met her, floating there, alone.
That was also the day I first felt love.
I will shape a world for her, so that then we can be happy together.
But then she chose someone else.
So I can never be happy.
It's pointless. I'll just reset everything, and try it over again.
I'll make her be mine, even if it takes one thousand years.
And it might.
FLASH
Girl A: Haaaaaaaaaaaah!
Right as I'm about to pounce... she jumps at me instead!?
Her feet hit me in the chest, knocking me back about five feet.
Girl A: This had better work!
I slowly realize that she'd managed to grab my headphones right before the impact.
No, not the headphones! I need those to live!
You little whore! Give those--
With a surprising show of strength, she breaks them in two.
I die.
...Dying hurts a lot.
FLASH
And always remember: LOVE LOVE THE QUEEN
FLASH
And then I wake up.
I stuck a Cabaret (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_D7AebhY4qg&feature=related) reference in there, by the way.
Please enjoy this and the previous scene. I hope to have finished the Kyonko path by tomorrow, but I make no promises.
Are you implying time loops are the result of Haruki save scumming the Kyonko route, or the player himself? :heh:
I am a little sad that the line "Ponytails turn me on." failed to make it in there. Imagine Kyonko being fed that line by a crazed Kyon. :D
You know, I'd like to suggest a path where Kyon has his head shrinked as a result these psychotic episodes. I'll suggest he has a troubled face at school, then gets pulled into a session by Tsuruya playing amatuer psychiatrist. She'll pull terms on him like the Ganzfeld effect (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ganzfeld_effect) or Misattribution (http://www.spring.org.uk/2008/02/how-memories-are-distorted-and-invented.php); but will feel that she's making fun of him when she starts talking about Freudian adolescent sexual confusion, soulmates, reincarnation, or even information tranfer by juxtaposition in quantum symmetry. Especially since she keeps laughing. He leaves when she tries to make him take an inkblot test she made with the ink and paper for calligraphy club. :p
Finally, I must congratulate you on a job well done. Writing six flavours of madness, and the response has been pretty good for every one of them. I don't think anyone is looking forward to the scenes where things make sense anymore. :heh:
But, in my opinon, what we have here is little more than a Green Eyed Monster.Referencing Green and Monster reminds me of the Boston Red Sox....Huh... The first thing I thought of was Parsee (http://touhou.wikia.com/wiki/Parsee_Mizuhashi), she has the power to manipulate jelousy, after all.
I find it interesting that the thread can derail so quickly...but then I ain't seen nuthin' yet.
C'mon, green? Nature, nature, nature. Meh. And money.:eyespin:
Kaisos, everyone's waiting for the co-operation route! Quickly!
dragon4dudes
2010-01-20, 17:14
This is what happens to progress. It halts.
This is what happens to progress. It halts.
Just because you don't see it, doesn't mean it's not happening.
http://dl.dropbox.com/u/1074190/Green%20World.png
"Now I'm in a green field, on the edge of a lush green forest. The sky is teal, and the sun is the color of emeralds."
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