Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha Character Creation and Discussion (second reincarnation) [Archive]

ghazghkull

2007-05-08, 21:28

This is a compilation of all the Original Characters created in this thread, with links to their original posts, made to make it easier for newcomers and everyone else to find other people's works.

IF THERE IS ANYTHING THAT IS OUT OF DATE, MESSAGE ME WITH THE APPROPRIATE LINKS, AND THE NAMES ATTACHED TO THE PROFILES

Requirements:
1: Link to the profiles of course
2: If it's a new profile, it requires to have been approved by Keroko, Liingo, or by majority

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Timelines

Official Nanoha Timeline (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1097265&postcount=6536), translation courtesy of Nightengale.

OC Thread's Fanon Timeline (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1099366&postcount=6606), compiled by Kha.

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The OC List

Created by -Fate- (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1602046&postcount=34))

Asclei Foresythe (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1616094&postcount=333)
Lanos Skylark (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1607703&postcount=174)
Fate T. Harlaown ver. -Fate- (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1658791&postcount=1302)
Sierra Lancer (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1606082&postcount=133)
Skryd Edge

Created by Aaron008R (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2303624&postcount=5943))

Created by Admiral Tigerclaw

TSAB Experimental Systems Test Force (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1603320&postcount=66)
TSAB SHOCK ENFORCERS (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1603321&postcount=67)

Created by AImost Pure

Minea Damuel (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1055641&postcount=4820)
- Minea's Diary #1 part 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1056714&postcount=4889), part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1058031&postcount=4940), part 3 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1058410&postcount=4963), part 4 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1060178&postcount=5027), part 5 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1061460&postcount=5094)
- Minea's Diary #2 part 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1062173&postcount=5119), part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1063169&postcount=5180), part 3 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1063731&postcount=5196), part 4 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1064950&postcount=5255), part 5 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1066461&postcount=5291)
- Minea's Diary #3 part 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1068862&postcount=5357), part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1070775&postcount=5446), part 3 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1072647&postcount=5537), part 4 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1076237&postcount=5661), part 5 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1078013&postcount=5711)
- Minea's Diary #4 part 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1082838&postcount=5909), part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1088675&postcount=6149), part 3 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1093759&postcount=6391), part 4 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1101344&postcount=6712), part 5 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1112166&postcount=7528)
Celesti Damuel (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1054612&postcount=4778)
Alexandria Damuel (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1054827&postcount=4792)
Vanissa Lantus (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1056269&postcount=4872)
Constance Gale Lantus (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1074300&postcount=5598)
Malakai Lian (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1096799&postcount=6526)
Felicia Lauren (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1115718&postcount=7755)

Created by An Hero in Disguise

TSAB Intelligence Department (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1070916&postcount=5447) Special Section D Commanding Unit "Vanguard"

Serge Blanc Romardo (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=973926&postcount=832)
- Dance of the Demons (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=975820&postcount=903)
- World's Colors (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1036800&postcount=4044)
Anatoly Belov (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=979490&postcount=1109)
Sarah S'Zet (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=979490&postcount=1109)
Ramsus Lakarn (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=979490&postcount=1109)
Mirian El Meyruun (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=979490&postcount=1109)

Created by AtomicoX (Complete OC List)

Odhinkar Sigrid (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2281278&postcount=5652)
Jónsdóttir Elizabeth (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2298914&postcount=5874)
Odhinkar Angelika (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2349103&postcount=6594)

Created by azuma-blade

Azuma-Blade (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=942358&postcount=107)
Azuma-Lance (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1108642&postcount=7162)

Created by Chaos2Frozen

Jeno (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1111983&postcount=7506)
- Character Bio part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1112059&postcount=7514)
Lance (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1116497&postcount=7814)
Cero (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1116497&postcount=7814)
Spica (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1120305&postcount=8147)
Clyde Haralown (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1275650&postcount=16944)

Created by dkellis (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1621301&postcount=503))

Nova Alto
Rancer LaSalle
Ivey de Lorien
Reiz Astra
Lumina Celeste (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1745431&postcount=2924)
Mei Landau (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1747847&postcount=2936)

Created by Dream_Traveller (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1090252&postcount=6204))

Marcellus Kai Edelmann (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1083981&postcount=5955)
The Letters A~I (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1099549&postcount=6618) J~L (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1116188&postcount=7785)
N~P (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1126920&postcount=8563)
Q~R (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1127694&postcount=8620)
Alaeith Korzaun (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1087998&postcount=6121)
Victor Tallareno Viraciu (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1090117&postcount=6199)
V (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1099549&postcount=6618)
Theodore "Theo" Stoff (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1113491&postcount=7599)
Sigourney Holland Ballantine (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1127486&postcount=8604)
Wyatt Cavendish (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1140859&postcount=9403)

Created by EnigmaticThief

Nicholas Tangath (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1007072&postcount=2619)

Created by Erio

Chapter SPECIAL 01: Maidens part 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1073042&postcount=5547), part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1081688&postcount=5849)
Extended Relic Weapons - Scaglietti's Elite Personal Unit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1100555&postcount=6659)

Clotho Buer, code name: "Raider"
Shani Andras, code name: "Forbidden"
Orga Sabnak, code name: "Calamity"

Sophia (Last Name unknown) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=938769&postcount=23)
- Close Combat Mage; Mage Rank: B; Magic System: Mid-Childa; Military Rank: none
- Preview: A professional bounty hunter and assassin, Sophia uses Materialization Magic to conjure weapons out of thin air.
Old Links part 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=972179&postcount=787), part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=975499&postcount=886), part 3 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=977202&postcount=972), part 4 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1014993&postcount=2924), part 5 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1021701&postcount=3287), part 6 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1035126&postcount=3958), part 7 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1039926&postcount=4206), part 8 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1097461&postcount=6554), part 9 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1120012&postcount=8112)

Created by Evangelion Xgouki (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1602878&postcount=56))

Shamsel Nagisa (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1200471&postcount=12998)
Ryoutaro Nogami (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1369710&postcount=19047)
Evangeline "Tsurugi" Kamishiro (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1520144&postcount=23246)
Megumi Kurenai (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2163383&postcount=4955)

Created by FieryAeon (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1602390&postcount=46))

Itsuki (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1145533&postcount=9755) (no family name)
Jean Sneijder (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1150389&postcount=10093)
Sylvia Bannes (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1159609&postcount=10757)
Fel Rilifane

Created by FlameSparkZ (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2342938&postcount=6494))

Keith (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=971068&postcount=764)

Maren (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=986899&postcount=1534)
- BreakerS (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1088646&postcount=6148)
Minawa Koji (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=990988&postcount=1678)
Minawa Yui (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1016659&postcount=3022)
Minawa Fuuko (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2339777&postcount=6426)
Ex-Treize (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1088646&postcount=6148)

Created by Fuyu no Sora

Disaster Relief and Special Investigations Unit's Second Branch "Blue Flame Squad"

Cassandra Alexa Ivanov (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=958254&postcount=306)
- Character Bio part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=958820&postcount=339), part 3 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=961758&postcount=406), part 4 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=963426&postcount=461)
Kali (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=963837&postcount=491)
Risa Nakamura (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=968726&postcount=695)
Lucas Hale (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=969023&postcount=703)
Angela Hale (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=972469&postcount=813)
Hiro Nakamura (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=974016&postcount=836)

Created by ghazghkull (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2359201&postcount=6705))

Hayashi Hayato (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1602691&postcount=52)
Reddo Farukon (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1603743&postcount=75)
Takamachi Vivio ver. Ghaz Revisions
Eulrepus Rue Revisions
Himemiya Chikane ver. Ghaz (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2324645&postcount=6229)
Kurusugawa Himeko ver. Ghaz Revisions
Ureha Masami (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2170994&postcount=4996)
(Unknown) Suvia (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2341383&postcount=6473)

Created by haiz123321

Koumyou (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1003630&postcount=2426)
Shakal (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1117168&postcount=7898)
Xeith (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1117950&postcount=7950)

Created by johnishida

Jhon (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=977761&postcount=1024)

Created by Kagerou (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1253493&postcount=15884))

Erick von Long
Glen Schattenman
Emili Nailo

Created by KBTKaiser (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1089409&postcount=6175))

Tennoka Mabiko (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1089409&postcount=6175)
Bakuretsu Kongou Kyoudai (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1032171&postcount=3862)
- Atarana Bakusou!! (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1089409&postcount=6175)

Created by Keroko (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1602038&postcount=32))

Takamachi Georashi Keroko (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=958100&postcount=302)
- Mid/long-range Dogfighting Mage; Mage Rank: S; Magic System: Aspect/Velka mixture; Military Rank: Commander
- Preview: Adopted sister of Nanoha and 'the fourth Ace', has been fighting alongside the group since the beginning.
Knight of the Sky, Tesla (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=987123&postcount=1562)
- Mid Range Combat Tactician; Mage rank: AAA; Magic system: Velka; Militairy Rank: Lieutenant.
- Preview: One of the Wolkenritter, Tesla is the group's tactician and ranged support.
Syn Virage (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1698979&postcount=2259)
Eden Acura (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1795455&postcount=3325)
Lady Alistina Carter
Chevelle Montier (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2376540&postcount=6891)
"Rogue Squadron"

Watarase Jun (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1039371&postcount=4171)
Tycho Chelchu (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1049983&postcount=4559)

Created by Kha (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1602189&postcount=40))

Characters in The New Velka Chronicles timeline:

Kha Alexei Testarossa (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=938474&postcount=2)
- [Alternate Universe] Corporal Kha Volks (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1015890&postcount=2980)
Sophia Alexei (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=957339&postcount=289)
- Character Bio part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=960677&postcount=379), part 3 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=992216&postcount=1733)
Artei von Braunmühl (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=957339&postcount=289)
Kaempfer (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=958909&postcount=345)
Allison Ford (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=964047&postcount=496)
Col. Gard Redel (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=970858&postcount=758)
Nagato Mach Zwei (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=974699&postcount=866)
Skane Lives! (An intro to him and the Imperial Velka Army) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=975687&postcount=896)
Caster (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=979345&postcount=1101)
Xealot (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=996315&postcount=1943)
Linda Zwei (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1002513&postcount=2342)
Saint Church's secret army The Regional Guard (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1034185&postcount=3913)

Characters in the Mahou Shoujo Lyrical Nanoka timeline:

Moriyama Nanoka, the Violet Angel (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1029186&postcount=3762)
Teresa Testarossa (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1029193&postcount=3764)
Claire-Marie Eugenie de Kluize, the Moonlight Butterfly (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1029201&postcount=3765)
Hoshikawa Rina Miharu (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1029207&postcount=3766)

Characters in the Throne of Heroes timeline:

Thomas Kluize (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=980325&postcount=1136)
- Character Bio part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1004940&postcount=2494)
Anna Wayne (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=980325&postcount=1136)
Si Fong (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=980325&postcount=1136)
Kirche (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=980325&postcount=1136)
Linda Lin (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=980325&postcount=1136)
Riviera AKA "The Flying Dutchman" (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=980325&postcount=1136)

Created by Kyral (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1602263&postcount=42))

Elric Thorn (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1218300&postcount=13824)
Rinya Shuri A’Kalash (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1259661&postcount=16262)

Created by Lelouch

Lif (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=944637&postcount=138)
- Character Bio part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=945005&postcount=146), part 3 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=952968&postcount=230)

Created by Liingo (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=974723&postcount=869))

Enforcer Unit 85

Myristic (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1013831&postcount=2887)
"Spellblades"

Isamu and Iza (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=974723&postcount=869)
Valivis (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1009406&postcount=2720)
Tuala (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1009406&postcount=2720)

- Spellblades vs Tais (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=978513&postcount=1040)
- Training part 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1019404&postcount=3184), part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1020363&postcount=3227), part 3 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1029297&postcount=3774), part 4 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1044675&postcount=4343), part 5 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1102889&postcount=6783)

Akilae (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=996654&postcount=1983)
- Character Bio part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1051242&postcount=4627)

Created by LimitedEternal (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1602602&postcount=50))

Asuka Ikari Tsukuyomi (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1150600&postcount=10100)
Aozora Shichifukujin (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1201011&postcount=13035)

Created by Loner

Shizuko (no family name) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=939324&postcount=43)

Created by LoweGear (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1602198&postcount=39))

Kaylin "Kay" Mathis
Glock Heckler
Mai Enna
LineBackers

Remington Smith
Colt Wesson

Rhythm Edge (Device)
Matsuri Miyama
BelkaRangers

Asagi Colwell
Mayura Labatt
Julie Liu Ming

Epsila Synaisthima

Created by Melodius Trueheart (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1602335&postcount=45))

List Under Compilation

Created by Meophist

Lunar System aka "Luna" (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=942314&postcount=105) (Device)
Maple Stense (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=954046&postcount=233)
Kana (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=956313&postcount=282)
Chaos Steine (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=967830&postcount=651)
Kuro (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=971678&postcount=780)
Sera (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=971678&postcount=780)
Threshold (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=973241&postcount=824)
- Character Bio part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=975605&postcount=888), part 3 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=976792&postcount=941)
Pain (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=973241&postcount=824)
- Character Bio part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=976255&postcount=925), part 3 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=976792&postcount=941)
West (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=982672&postcount=1251)
"The Gentle Wind" Zephyr (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=982672&postcount=1251)
East (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=982672&postcount=1251)
"The Fierce Wind" Tempest (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=982672&postcount=1251)
South (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=982672&postcount=1251)
"The Cursed Wind" Vayeate (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=982672&postcount=1251)
Ragos Steine (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=990177&postcount=1641)
- Character Bio part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=992440&postcount=1737)
Kase Malidora (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1004924&postcount=2493)
Former members of the 34th Lost Logia Search Forces

Libra Ganene (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=951940&postcount=209)
Katel Stense (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=954046&postcount=233)
Zarithia Saah (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1000279&postcount=2192)
Aetis Zast (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1000279&postcount=2192)
Ennis Jesca (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1003011&postcount=2404)
Oste Welsteinkast (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1007411&postcount=2634)
Quos Ien (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1007411&postcount=2634)
Raj Maren (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1010411&postcount=2751)

Réa Kas (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1111135&postcount=7380)
Ennis Jesca (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1111135&postcount=7380)

Created by Mow Yun

Krystal Nenotna (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=969286&postcount=705)
- Short Blurbs (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1008209&postcount=2671)

Created by Nightengale (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1602522&postcount=48))

Before Nanoha: Chronicles of Gil Graham

Artificial Receptionary Intelligence Android Type-Weapon/A.R.I.A (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=939861&postcount=48)
Florentina “Flora” Chrysler Lieze (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=941532&postcount=70)

BEFORE Saga

[I]Background Trivia: A Belkan fanon historical context: chapter 1: Velka: The Birth of 2 Kingdoms (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=944691&postcount=141), chapter 2: Velka: The Desert Empire (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=952560&postcount=226)
Isdera Saleen (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=968220&postcount=675)
Wira Res-Brusche (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=969385&postcount=706)
Astra Sol-Kry-Ea (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=970530&postcount=749)

SAGA of Saga

Saga (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=970804&postcount=755)

AFTER Saga

Future Zerstroritter (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1056026&postcount=4861)

TSAB : Behind the Light of AceS and StrikerS

Joseth Hai Ma bin Kasim (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1089382&postcount=6173)
Austin Gloster Abrams (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1041304&postcount=4247)
Akira Schneider Hibiki (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1101214&postcount=6706)
Dranac Pars Hibiki (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1101214&postcount=6706)

Unknown

Zone (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=964797&postcount=511)
Hona Zwei Fuwa (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=957611&postcount=298)
Zerria Scaglietti (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1102631&postcount=6757)
- Character Bio part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1111895&postcount=7501)
Juliet Scaglietti (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1106347&postcount=6959)

Created by Pheonixfyre

Kria "Rake" Phennyl (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=941502&postcount=68)
Hino Tori (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=942858&postcount=112)
Dione West (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=953713&postcount=231)

Created by PhoenixFlare (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1602207&postcount=40))

Leona Aurora Seraphina Tyriel (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1171759&postcount=11576)

Created by Ratler

"Diamond Squad"

Alexander Ivanov (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=961721&postcount=404)
- EB part 1 & part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1059434&postcount=5006)
Treu (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1049304&postcount=4521)
Daniel Hunter (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1049304&postcount=4521)
Kai Himura (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1049304&postcount=4521)
Aoi Hinoma (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1049304&postcount=4521)

Created by Reiji Tabibito

Rim Advance Force, 82nd Squadron, the "Noble Phantasms"

Melinia Yoshitaka (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1003477&postcount=2424)
Thomas MacFarn (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1003783&postcount=2435)
Sevasti Secastan (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1003837&postcount=2442)
Arcasaviel Emira (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1003860&postcount=2447)

- Pre-Seven Days Shorts (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1008039&postcount=2667)
- Seven Days (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1048636&postcount=4493)

Created by Riddly

Riddly Tarisforth (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1123996&postcount=8362)

Created by Ryand-Smith (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1399786&postcount=19751))

Created by Saint X (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1602638&postcount=51))

Ashton Marten Mcdouglas (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1038023&postcount=4106)
Kyla Scrya (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1054634&postcount=4781)
Rurika (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1064472&postcount=5223)
Nonaha (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=954245&postcount=234)
Dios Treilin (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=969407&postcount=708)
CC (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=974072&postcount=839)
Minerva (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=975861&postcount=905)
Chacha (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=975861&postcount=905)
Night Mintra Estel de Danaan (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=986807&postcount=1526)
Andrei Ilanovich Antonov (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=996532&postcount=1965)
Reverie (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1021474&postcount=3267)
Axelle (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1091196&postcount=6227)
The Key Devices (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1106416&postcount=6968)

Created by Satty

Satoshi Kazukuni (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=970590&postcount=751)
- SearcherS part 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1051020&postcount=4613), part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1059142&postcount=4989), part 3 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1073211&postcount=5557), part 4 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1082024&postcount=5878), part 5a (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1095859&postcount=6459), part 5b (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1100509&postcount=6657), part 6 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1109714&postcount=7273), part 7 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1129374&postcount=8746), part 8 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1138018&postcount=9183), part 9 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1150998&postcount=10118), part 10 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1169374&postcount=11420), part 11 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1250675&postcount=15706)
Betrüger (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=978649&postcount=1049)
Sydney Megane (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=989821&postcount=1628)
Vincent Fiorano (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=995314&postcount=1893)
Satsuki Himeno (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1013362&postcount=2858)
Black Wolf (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1017069&postcount=3041)
Hollow (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1023030&postcount=3416)
Alexi Yevgeny Bulgakov (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1034938&postcount=3942)
Rachel Stada (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1051020&postcount=4613)
Nobuyuki Takahashi (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1067476&postcount=5308)
Sion (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1106065&postcount=6919)
Hikaru K. Karyu (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1109277&postcount=7227)
Anne Vel Sithis (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1127205&postcount=8582)
Arvis Forsynth (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1133434&postcount=8958)
Lian Wu Zhao (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1311448&postcount=17981)

Created by Serenity85

Aselia Mayio (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=938691&postcount=14)
- Character Bio part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=939865&postcount=49)

Created by Shadow Angel

Darien Valentine (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1005572&postcount=2548)

Created by Sheba (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1602297&postcount=43))
Characters:

Roland Rafale (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1383776&postcount=19333)
Diana Dornier (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1547064&postcount=23703)
Kyoya Kibagami (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1421820&postcount=20614)
Pranee Chamlong (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1437118&postcount=21189)
Sieraza, Pranee's familiar (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1437125&postcount=21190)
Antigone Kolokouri, and her summon, Arngrim (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1470047&postcount=22301)
Ynana (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1478611&postcount=22485)
Morgan de Havilland (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1505791&postcount=22801)
The Majestic Twelve (Antagonist) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=2357239#post2357239)

Factions:

House of Borgia (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1726671&postcount=2594)

Created by SpaceBrotha (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1602528&postcount=49))

List Under Compilation

Created by stormturmoil

David Brown (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1603251&postcount=66)

Created by Tempest Dynasty (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1602495&postcount=47))

Noland Reiniger (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1618350&postcount=384)

Created by Timeless Enigma

Setsuya "Soul Assassin" Amemiya (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=938530&postcount=6)

Created by TheShinySword

Kaon (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2343928&postcount=6506)
Thaddeus Remington Manroe (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2383263&postcount=6997)
Remy's Familiar's (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2404967&postcount=7182)

Created by Tk3997 (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1603687&postcount=72))

Felix Munro (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1111331&postcount=7415)
- Character Bio part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1113320&postcount=7588)
Alan Aiken (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1111988&postcount=7507)
Garm Team (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1130381&postcount=8809)
Jack O’Neil (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1134286&postcount=8997)

Created by Tormenk (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1602720&postcount=53))

Katrina
Gen Ealin (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1164904&postcount=11152)
Jack Kell
J.G. Jag
Jas Ellen
Jec

Created by tshouryuu (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=975647&postcount=890))

TSAB Central Science & Development Bureau
- Located on Mid-Childa, the CSDB is the main research facility of the TSAB. Consist of some of the greatest mage scientists around who constantly creates new technologies for the use of the TSAB members.

Tais Scien (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=975647&postcount=890)
- Short to Mid range combat mage; Mage Rank: D+; Magic System: Mid-Childa
- Preview: Full time designated field operator for E.V.A device. Weird person who has very, very bad luck and a major crush on Ginga Nakajima. Has nickname of "Biggest Loser of the TSAB".
Seles (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=997424&postcount=2019)
- Unbond familiar of Tais; Mage rank: Unknown - Assuming D+; Magic system: Unknown - Assuming Midchilda
- Preview: Like the master, very weird. Looks human with no sign of animal parts. Very popular with the guys but girls hate her at first sight. Currently staying at the CSDB.
Shouryuu Tsuzuki (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1001500&postcount=2267)
- Mage scientist; Mage rank: A mixed; Magic system: Mid-Childa
- Preview: The current director of the CSDB. A smart but crazy, sick, equal opportunity pervert of the greatest caliber.

Others

Vidalia "The Blasphemer" (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1004917&postcount=2492)
- Mid range combat mage; Threat level: S+; Magic System: Runic
- Preview: Familiar of a dead mage who believes in heresy. Mission in life is to spread and prove her master's heresy where ever she goes.
Clio (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1252220&postcount=15796)

Created by USB500 (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=938492&postcount=4))

Annabelle Gato
- Long-range Bombardment/Defense Support Mage; Mage Rank: A; Magic System: Mid-Childa
- Preview: Granddaughter of General Armstrong, Annabelle is very protective towards her friends and will not hesitate to unleash the strongest attacks if necessary.
Leopold Grandeur
Joshua Merlin
Alexandra Enfield
- Close Combat Knight; Mage Rank: C+; Magic System: Visalia (also reflects Belkan system)
- Preview: The gentle Narulian village girl, she finds herself destined to carry on the legacy of the legendary King Arthur after accidentally unlocks the Intelligent Armed Device Excalibur.
Kazahana Shinnosuke
- Long-range Support Mage (Healing/Protection); Mage Rank: AAA+; Magic System: Mid-Childa
- Preview: The Great Teacher of TSAB, Shinnosuke doesn't see himself superior to his students and always treats them with equality.
Hikki Kokurabuji
- Close Combat Knight; Mage Rank: S; Magic Systems: Mid-Childa/Belka/Narulia hybrid
- Preview: The only living Gale Whistler and owner of the secretive Chronograph, Hikki does not care of everything around him as long as he can care of his own survival.
The Belkan Gunslingers

Takeru
- Description: a young sniper who gains the moniker "Silent Bullet", he excels at striking target from long distance without being noticed by target. He owns a powerful Armed Device named Silberkugel (Silver Bullet).
Frieda Johansson
- Description: one of the leading Belkan Knights, she is the only known practitioner of Gun Kata and among the best gunslinger of her class. Her Armed Device, a Gunblade, is named Beowulf.

The History of Britannia

Arthur
- Description: the king of Camelot and unifier of Britannia, he is the owner of the coveted Intelligent Armed Device "Excalibur".
Lancelot
- Description: the fallen Knight of the Round Table, he betrays Arthur and kills his wife Guinevere before challenging him in a fated duel at the Ice Desert.
Guinevere
- Description: Arthur's beloved wife, she sacrifices her life for the good of her husband and the kingdom.

The Wind Talkers
- Description: the Wind Talkers (271st Special Operation Unit) are also known as "The Whisperers" and very famous for their role in deciphering secret codes and ancient languages. They are also proficient in many languages and often selected as the bureau's unofficial interpretors.
Frederick Khan
Ninja Wizard
The Gemini Sisters (Aura & Freya)
- Nobody knows who they come from or what is inside their mind, but they (along with a Lost Logia named Poseidon) are dangerous opponents who have eluded Belkan Knight capture for many times.
Aces of the Free Sky
Swallow 7
El Cid 1
Aurelia: Fliers' Heaven (World)
Kagami
Yuuko
Simone
Kagura Harrier

Created by Wibbles

Hikaru von Lieben (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1117981&postcount=7953)
Miria Hasser (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1108902&postcount=7197)
Katsuhito Kuroshi/Satsuhito Kuroshi (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1116255&postcount=7787)
Ignatius Volterra (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1115985&postcount=7774)
Largo Sercosan (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1141252&postcount=9425)
Testarossa Family (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1637030&postcount=890)

Created by Wild Goose (Complete OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1602330&postcount=44))

List Under Compilation

~~~

Other miscellaneous and useful information found in the thread:

Proper Weight-Height Ratio for characters (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=963872&postcount=494), thanks to Aaron008R.
List of CC's Military Ranks (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1400611&postcount=19788), thanks to dkellis.

PhoenixFlare

2008-05-18, 07:35

Satte ... In a bid to oust Aaron out of his seat ...

MAXIMUM BACKLOG BREAKER!

(This combines everything I've missed for the past two months till the current day :heh:)

Replies are sorted according to person, so it's easier. :D

==========

FINALLY :D

Managed to finish another update to the Blue Magician Julie Liu Ming's profile, here's Part V

-snip-

:nod::nod::nod:

The Wizard Spells make Julie the Ninja of Ninjas indeed.

Strike Balls made me cringe at first, but luckily the spell's effect wasn't what I had in mind. :heh:

And thumbs up for the creative Infinite Effects Studio! :D:D:D It'd be a great distraction indeed when suddenly a sword is on fire but no heat is felt ("GHOST FIRE!"). :p

YATTE YARUZE!!!

Final Update of Ninja of Ninja Julie Liu Ming's profile is up!

-snip-

Somehow, Seven Swords remind me of the Chinese movie, though the link seems to be absent here. :heh:

Anyway, this profile is LOVE and WIN! :D

Cannonball Shoot is a neat move (I was sort of imagining a trampoline :heh:), Iron Blizzard is most painful from the description (and using three rings is scary, the speed must be hypersonic :uhoh:), Sturm Bolt is quirky as it is effective (anti-stupid :heh:), Buster Homerun is most nicely thought out :nod:, and OMNI Blade is scary :uhoh: (*sends a prayer for whoever gets hit by that for invoking the persona Trisha out into the battlefield, including Sven* :p).

Julie's interpersonal relationship is very much understandable (but Trisha is just plain scary! :uhoh:), but hopefully, Gilliam Aker can help resolve that once and for all. And this calls for MUCH WANT NAO!

SURPRISE PROFILE POSTO!!!!!!!!!

Now for something the IRC guys know, and now posting the first part now:

-snip-

I'm surprised you actually use the names, and combining the two as well. :heh:

Anyway, Eppy-chan is made of sweet love and niceness :D. Despite her shattered self (apt name, by the way), she finds herself an optimistic girl and happy-go-lucky (well, practically, unless Anger, Sadness, and/or Fear gets agitated) under the care of the Belkarangers. I originally thought she'd be more attached to Julie because of the similarity in their personality, but Mayura seems to take the role of her mother very nicely. :D

Working in a museum sounds like a fitting job for Eppy (and she can filch multiple entry fees to boot :p).

... I don't know what possessed me to finally write this, but DAMN do I feel good doing so, even though it may not be my best work.

And now, without further ado...

"Super Hero Time!

Starts Now!"

-snip-

I laugh a lot in this short chapter, especially about Asagi's antics with Sergeant Griggs :heh::heh::heh:. And their burning and explosive fire is quelled not by such a small fry like Griggs apparently :p.

GO GO MADOUKISHI SENTAI!

And continuing from the last chapter...

Belkarangers Task One, Hajimarimasu!

-snip-

At first, I thought the narration was about the antagonist for the Belkarangers, but it ended up being ... Gilliam Aker?! :eek:

Definitely nice save as Mayura has said! :D And no doubt, in a newly-wed bridal position ... *cries tears of joy for Julie*

*runs*

*sneaks in*

*drops package*

-snip-

This made me go :heh: and :uhoh: at the same time. It's a nice opening to Kaylin and Glock's meeting. Though it started out with bad blood, I'm sure the improvement is underway for the eventual *static*. Nice going with Glock manhandling Kaylin (:p) and getting access to her private storage. I wonder, what does she keep in there ... maybe *static* and *static* or *static*?

*flees*

Now for something new... it's kinda rare for me to dwell more on worlds than on characters, but this bit is related to TASK ONE :nod:

Thus, without further ado:

-snip-

*thumbs-up!*

It's not everytime that we see a world is described in detail, the only one I've read so far is TK's Planine. This presents yet another bloody conflict instigated by the Book of Darkness back before it went to Earth, and TSAB's darker side in employing the Arc against the Logia. Is Kaylin simply prejudiced against the Bureau after what Glock did to her? :p

[Master Arm Locked]

Considering the initial concept, I kinda feel this next scenario is somewhat... rushed. Then again it wasn't meant to be long so...

Presenting a short humble scenario entitled:

-snip-

LOWEPIC! MAIXSMITH! SWEETCHEESIUM!

The scene builds up very nicely, and I can certainly understand the indirect kiss-u. I went "Awww~" when Mai went for more.

Nice Wesson-Julie combo double team to make the scene possible! (And thanks for the clarification for that :heh:)

MOAR!

P/S: Are you sure you don't want to change the title to "Lust" instead? :uhoh:

*flees at ludicrous speed*

==========

Keroko-kun: Wow, I didn't think he'd actually do it, concidering I've got... what? 3 incarnations of myself in the thread already?

Keroko-chan: No kidding, there's me, the impulsive think-before-you-act side of you, not to mention the *ahem* feminine side. Then there is Kerokun, your laid back 'lets not worry about that today, maybe tommorow' side, and then there is Keroko-tan, which is, well...

Keroko-kun: Me in a nustshell when playing games.

Keroko-chan: Yeah, that. Small tip people: When Keroko is building superweapons, he's not doing it without a reason. You can bet that as soon as the timer reaches zero, he'll fire the damn thing.

Keroko-kun: Or several.

Keroko-chan: You mean like when you payed Generals Death Valley with the China Nuke general and let your comrades handle the defenses while you leisurely build nukes?

Keroko-kun: Yup. Hmmm, fifteen nuke timers counting down. Ah, I loved that match. :D

Keroko-chan: .... yes, I can see where Keroko-tan gets it.

:eek::eek::eek:

The sheer number of Kerokos is ... :eyespin::eyespin::eyespin:

Type-0 Sentoukijin
Rebuilt of Uomo

http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y191/Liinna/Nanoha/Uomo_Casual.png

-snip-

The Rebuild of Uomo certainly features some nice (and quite flawless) integration of this combat cyborg into canon storyline. I thought she's a he, but I was proven wrong at the outset :p (it's the other way around). I like the trait about his deceptive capability, makes him a very efficient spy indeed :nod:.

I was wondering about the part where he gets personal growth from Subaru and Ginga, and then him doing infiltration that goes against these two. Wouldn't he be suffering from ... say, some sort of guilt? Being a double-faced member of both TSAB and NOD can be difficult most of the time.

His skills and spells are wonderful and certainly complement his role as spy and infiltrator and assassin :nod:. I personally think that if Kratos and/or Leona ever faces Uomo, an interesting battle of intelligence and counterintelligence is going to happen. :heh:

Whoogyaaaah! Long read! :eyespin: Action, drama, did the others survive? Will the Templars manage to escape? Questions questions. :eyespin:

Most questions will be answered in the next few chapters. :)

That is ... if my bluecheese juice supply didn't run out halfway through. :uhoh:

Needless to say, the best part in my eyes is of course the awesome Signum/Tesla battle against Grandia. :D And it was ended with true finishers. Definetely has my Seal of Aproval. :3

Ah, yes, thanks for the seal!

I was kind of worried that it might have led to Tesla being shafted in some scenes and that's kind of bad of me to do so <_<. Frankly, I have no idea how a tactician is supposed to function in frontline, except executing some moves that complement their allies', thereby boosting their battle prowess and chance of victory. All in all, the thinking cap managed that, somewhat, though I'm still feeling bad that Tesla isn't getting enough screen-time. Signum seems to be dwarfing Tesla in her shadow. Sorry. >_<

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I swear, at this rate a songfic (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=p99QanR8Mr0) will come out based on these lively characters alone...

Not that this was swirling in my head while on a 45 minute ride which left my rear aching...
Now to recall those darn thoughts.

This song is a GREAT WIN! :D:D:D

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I just finished the drawing :D

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v33/zetar0n1n/Artwork/breakers_caramell.jpg

:D

Too bad I couldn't fit Altea there :heh::heh:
Oh, well, I'll just do one with Koji and her :D:D

*runs*

... ULTIMATE CARAMELLDANSEN! :heh:

And that's a very nicely drawn pic! :D

:heh::heh:
It's amazing how a simple question can trigger all this... :heh:

Anyways...here's Chapter 23!

-snip-
Why does this chapter has this name? You'll find out in the next part :rolleyes:

That's it for now :D
The next part should be posted soon, sicne most of it is already written, just needs to be revised and updated :D

But right now, I'm tired...:heh:
*goes to bed*

Very intriguing chapter. Me wonders what Koji wants to ask.

Well...seems like I can't finish this chapter in 2 parts :heh:

Anyway...here's part 2 :D

-snip-

:eek::eek::eek:

Mucho surprises indeed, especially Treize's condition. I didn't know the sleepiness and blur personality is a direct effect of her genes. Well, let's not get her grow up so fast :p.

And Koji's Heart Waver is a greater surprise, and an apt name for the skill. Guess Koji realizes that everyone likes him not because he's likable, but because of his power, and that's quite a blow to his psyche. The part on Relic #11, though, had me going :twitch:, because it seems to go against canon. Then again, Jail might be conning Lutecia to believe that the Relic is needed to revive Alpino when it isn't really the case. :3

Very nice chapter, we need MOAR! :p

Okay, time to get the chapter over with :heh:

Here goes...
-snip-
It's not too cheesy, is it? :rolleyes::heh:
I hope this cleans things up...and maybe no hammer will fall down on me :uhoh:

Final Boss was somewhat revealed...I hope its 'partnership' with Scaglietti doesn't bring more problems...

And yeah, Koji has a weak spot for girls with long hair :D

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I'm thinking of making an inbetween chapter (aka Chapter 23a) focused on Zafira, as in "A day in the RF6", maybe even from Zafira's point of view.
To, you know, unshaft the Shafted One for a while :heh::heh:

After that, work on the following chapter, "Second Date", that takes place a week or so after this chapter, jumping back into Maren's Route. :D
And with this chapter, Maren's older sister, Scarlet is finally introduced :heh:

Well...I'm gonna go relax over there...
*walks to a quiet spot*

EDIT: Changed the infirmary scene to adapt to the changes in the previous part :heh:

... Now, who's the one talking with Jail? This is sounding like the prelude to something really big.

Maren and Koji are sharing a closer relationship, it seems, after the meeting with Jail, which is a very good thing. Maren's female instinct is perking in the right wavelength, though, especially about Koji liking the "long-haired" females :p.

And to unshaft the Shielding Beast Zafira is a must!

Zafira: *growl* Finally, my own scene! :mad:

:heh:

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Wee New chars!

-snip-

:heh:

Daisy is certainly an interesting one. And her past-times made me go :eyespin:. Praying on Alan's "defective dating gene" had me laughing silly. :heh:

Nobody messes with this girl and gets away unscathed. :mad::heh: Maximum firepower indeed :uhoh:.

-snip-

I like Rose! :D Daisy is mean for shoving her to the front to tank fire, but that's what Rose is good at :p. Her spells would make head aches for the enemy, no doubt. :heh:

-snip-[/spoiler]

This is a nice dish to let us have an overview of Kou and Shin, and my, aren't their tempers explosive? :heh: (I think this applies to most in the series, though :p.)

Nicely written aerial battle, but Vita and Felix botched this capture in a most unlikely and funny way :p. Nice save on the boy, and even nicer remark by Felix. I love "red-headed little shrew" a lot! :D

And the drive-through scene is funny like hell! :D:D:D

-snip-

Zubov is a tricky guy, all right. No wonder Felix got a bit miffed at his reappearance.

I have to love the "interview" between Felix and the captive. Well done on the part! :D Pixy's mention of the good steak Felix cooks certainly is a nice addition to his already rich personality. Mm, and the everpresent Vita x Felix vibes feel doubly awesome! :D:D:D

And response team, go, go, go! :p

Since we seem to be on the topic of magic and such I might as well throw some of my own recent stuff into the fray to give some examples of new magic systems that are IMO at least balanced.

First off we have a very partial profile of a new OC but the big focus is the shooting arts of Planine.

-snip-

This is such a surprise. I thought I was reading about a person, but instead it turned out to be a profile of the world :p. You need updates! :mad:

Anyway, Planine certainly is an interesting world. It's medieval and modern at the same time, combining elements of both the Eastern and Western worlds. I like it that they use conventionals coupled with magic, especially when they launch bullets and arrows and magically amplify the speed for greater impact (reminds me of Lowe's Wizard Ring :heh:), and it even allows them to circumvent TSAB's policies :p.

Very good thought in this.

-snip-

Ah, Kou's partner-in-crime :p. Quite the antagonist of Kou's more explosive temper, but that's what make them click, no doubt :heh:. Cracking jokes in the middle of combat is a plus point for his carefree personality :D.

I see that this style focuses on speed and stealth, as compared to the power of the Belkan style. And Shin makes the first character to ever use a kusarigama, I think. Very good! :D

Of course a magical world can't live on melee along so on that note we take a look at another school of magic from the 14th world via another of it's practitioners you all might also know.
-snip-

And this ends our little look at the magic stylings of the 14th world as envisioned by me I have one more OC from this world, but she'll be written up later and won't intro anything drastically different.

Ah, so this is why Kou is such a snappish and temperamental person. Dysfunctional family almost always has that kind of effect. But, I guess, if he wasn't in that kind of situation, he wouldn't have become the person he is today. That, plus he wouldn't meet the Whispering Death instructor if he's a happy little kid. :)

The school of Whispering Death being targeted as evil and slaughter-on-sight surprised me, but understandable. Assassins tend to get bad ratings even if they did a good job.

Kou's number of arrows is amusingly handwaivium (:p), but his spells are good and practical. One question though, what's the difference between Obstructing Fog and Concealing Haze? They sound and work similar effects to my understanding.

Alright PF here you go Cipher mostly finished Profile, the history will be filled in soon:
-snip-

EXCELLENT WORK! :D:D:D

This delicious profile I can put to good use. The background is short and sweet (glad he's a purist :D). And ranged specialist, roger on that account.

I must say his icy arsenal is going to prove very useful in the scenario I have. Expect a few Arctic Blasts and/or Breakers :p. North Wind had me laughing a bit, though :heh:.

"Subject to change" if you think up something wicked cool caught me off-guard there. Don't do anything drastic, or I'll hunt ye down! :p

Those of you on IRC might recall I mentioned this before, well I was serious and so I present the initial profile of someone that most of you might find a bit familiar with...
-snip-

He'll be serving as a somewhat morally ambiguous antagonist in my new fic though he won't appear for a bit.

Ah, the Red Baron finally makes an appearance, and ... ANTAGONIST?! Oh dear, seems like Felix and company will be having their hands full handling him.

The history is rich and well-written, I certainly like the part where he retorts to his superior ("My dear Excellency, I have not gone to war to collect cheese and eggs ...") to get a reassignment, but his combat ability certainly shines during the battles he participated. His meeting with the Garm squadron is quite expected :nod:.

I'm surprised that being an antagonist, he's has a good sense of modicum and respect for his foes. Nice touch on him working with the lower classes despite being a higher-class.

The fated battle (if any) between him and the company is much anticipated. :D

Threads a bit slow at the moment isn't it?

Well whatever now seems as good a time as any to post up another random profile of someone that won't appear for like another two chapters in the story. Anyway I preset to you my stories wheelma--- errr woman.

-snip-
Way I see it just like the forwards "ripped off" the Aces people will now start ripping off the forwards since they're bound to have become rather famous... it's the cycle of life or magical plagiarism at least. Plus having someone zipping around on motorized roller skates smashing people with a polearm is just too much fin to write about for me to pass up. :p

Yeah, yeah I should be finishing off chapter two of my fic, but banging out all these profiles this is so much more fun and easier to do...

Now, Izumi is a character that totally blew me away when I read her (and it's not her bust size, which is quite nonexistent in the character image :p). She blew me away because she's so unexpected and at the same time computes. It's not everyday when you see characters whose specialty lies in driving, and even has a Device that helps her in that! :D The spells, though, are :eyespin::eyespin::eyespin:. She must be the absolute last boss in Need for Speed or some racing game, quite unbeatable :heh:.

I think the TSAB's public property compensation increases annually by many folds ... :uhoh::heh:

Well it's done... and it came out nearly as long as the first one; 14.3k words total. Beware that this chapter lacks action of any sort and includes ALLOT of talking and just a bit of INTENSE INVESTIGATING ACTION. :p So without further ado Chapter 2: The Return of Atuwe!!!

Well no that’s not that title acutally its…
-snip-

Ah, so it seems that Nanoha has been relegated to office duty, guess she's still having the side-effects from the damage. On the up side, she seems to have gotten herself better skills in breaking awkward conversations :p.

I had a good amount of laughter reading Makoto, Kou, and Shin's mental conversation on what they learnt about Felix and Pixy's "brighter" nature :heh:. Very well done, there! :D Pixy has some honed housecleaning skills, there. :D

And poor Kou, working the larger portion of the assignment meant for the team. :heh:

And where we have part two of this bomb...

-snip-

Practical Felix is practical, even considering to take tissues for DNA analysis :heh:. And great shot with the interrogation, sleek and sly :).

And here comes Atuwe, one of the most hailed hacker of all! :D Then, the shafting begins ... and rather intense ones, too :uhoh:. First by Felix, and then by Irene :heh::p. I have to give Irene two thumbs-up on her effortless action to set Atuwe on the right direction. Guess she's meaner than Felix is. :heh:

And lastly
-snip-

And lastly some author ramblings!

Not much action going on in this chapter and not much Vita either, but hey let’s face it investigations aren’t really her thing so what are you gonna do? So what WAS she doing for most of this? Taking allot of naps perhaps? Fear not though she’ll be back to show off what she’s best at next chapter… indiscriminate destruction.

Felix of course is still around plenty being the main character and all and a couple of background guys of mine get some spotlight too mainly Atuwe and O’Neil who shows that yes he DOES do something besides nap in his office all day. Irene is around quite a bit too and her and Felix seem to get on rather well…

This chapter acutally ended up bigger then I expected and I even edited some scenes out that I felt didn’t really add allot to the plot and were holding up my progress. It was mostly some Vita/Pixy stuff and a bit of fluff about the Recon teams forming up which I admit in this final product feels a tad forced and rushed, but I was tired of this chapter and wanted to move on. I may write these up later as Sound Stages of a sort. (Probably not being the lazy bum I am)

When will the next chapter arrive you ask? Why when it’s done of coruse!

You deliver another amusing chapter that's filled with dry hilarity and sarcasm, and the closing isn't lacking them :p.

Felix seems to have inherited some of O'Neill's manipulative habits, seen in his ability to basically shove a reluctant Kou into line :heh:. I wonder who the "four" guys are ...

And does Atuwe always ramble to himself? :p

Do write faster, or I'll have to clamp your rear to the computer ... permanently. :p

LOL bangwagon! So yeah since everyone is rebuilding there OC recently I figured why the hell not?

So I present first of "Rebuild of Felix" -snip-

And Just to round out my Power Trio I finally present you with a Proper (mostly) complete Profile for...
-snip-

Yeah, yeah Fic I know but these are more fun to do and I don't have to think as much while I'm taking my finals Profiles for Keller, Macmillan, and Miller are in the works and will probably appear short as well. Anyway I'll comments on some of the posts today later.

Mm, nice double profile bluecheesium :D!

Felix certainly lives up to his reputation depicted in your current fic, being sarcastic whenever he can (which seems to be almost always). A good smattering of sarcasm always livens up the atmosphere :D. His juvenile record was a little unexpected, but I guess everyone does have a mean streak in their life at one point or another. Glad he found his path after all those years. The spells are as practical as the person is. :)

Pixy gives me a little bit of a creep initially, what with annihilating his enemies single-handedly. Even more terrible is his early years where he's somewhat of a mean terrorist. Luckily, he manages to see things in perspective and leaves his past behind, which no doubt leads to the improvement in his mood and attitude :). Some habits die hard (he's still spoiling for a fight, it seems, and now taking Vita with him!), in any case, but at least he's much better than he was previously :D. Nice quote, by the way. Pending spell list just spoils this wonderful profile :p.

Soooo who wants to read my long ass spiel about Electronic Warfare in Nanoha and my prototype character for the specialization?

*crickets can be heard*

Well screw you I'm posting it anyway prepare to be buried under an avalanche of technical and tactical jargon maggots! :mad:

First off we have an 3,000 word in character essay as a primer! -snip-That was fun to ready wasn't it?! Now let's see how we can apply all this wonderful tactical theory can be applied to a character!

-snip-

Ahhh that felt good! I just love droning on and on about tactics and strategy, wouldn't you all agree?
*Everyone in the thread posters and OCs alike can be seen to be asleep with many of them drooling.*
Well I though it was interesting.:rolleyes:

*pops a bubble*

Uh, huh?

*looks around*

Er ... No, I didn't fall asleep, honestly I didn't! (Only napping, yep, it's napping!)

Rebecca-san wakes me up with her big *static*!

*runs*

Good going with the spiel, skimmed through and detected some things that I can use for Kratos/Leona :p.

Rebecca is as good for an ECM as she is in looks (*ahem*). Her spell arrays are definitely designed to jam and confuse Device functions and spells, and that makes her an excellent support :D. Let's see if Kratos can learn a trick or two from her ... even if his field involves little in this area (he's more into detection, surveillance, illusion-breaking, counterintelligence, and hacking), but hey, improvements are always welcome. :D

So the OC is one year old eh I’ve been here like half that time, but it stills seems to have flown by awfully fast… So we managed 24,256 posts in a year let’s break that down:

That means we averaged:
2021 post a month
70 Posts per day
2.7 Post and Hour
Or 1 post every 21 minute

That’s either something to be proud of or slightly scary…

Anyway since I felt the need to acutally put up some content to mark the day I decided to do a little short side story… that ended up being 4,000 words. This needs a bit of set up it takes place during the as yet unpublished Chapter 3 of my fic and is a bit a side story/background/intro fic. In the end it turned out to be a sort of Izumi intro fic more then anything else… basiclly I wanted a break from what I was doing and felt like writing a car chase and this was the result.

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I think my reply to you is the longest in this backlog breaker. :heh:

Anyway, this is why I say Izumi blows me away! Excellent driving coupled with excellent attitude, and she's a badass in her own right! :D Firsthand experience with her driving skills is bound to upset the stomach and kill the appetite, not to mention the possibility of making motion sickness an infectious disease with her being the main causative agent! :p

Poor Rico, Alice, and Alan, and luckily Rico was quick enough to cut off her protest. :p

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Been a while...:heh:

I'll tackle the backlog at a late time, but for now, I have to post my entry to Rebuilt.

-Entry to Rebuilt-

~Serena Avenir~

-snip-

This profile needs a serious update! :mad::heh:

Serena is lovely as she is effective. Thumbs up for the "not-an-elitist" Serena, because I think we've had enough of those in the stereotypical anime, but she's also "not-a-socialist" Serena, which is a nice combo. :D

Siegerion sounds like a good device (would've loved to hear the butler-ish speeches :p). And yes, over-thinking is bad.

Kha, out with the Rebuilt already, we need this gal in action! :p

Back on business...:3 =3 >3

The Divine Hammer of Inspiration strikes in most unexpected moments.:p
And it just struck me a while ago. Here's the result

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I hope I got Keroko-chan right! ><
Anyways, this may or may not be part of GenerationS when it's nearing completion. But the chance is high.:nod:
And I got to try characterizing Grandis for the first time properly.:D

>:3

How was it?><

One sentence: KEROKO IS CUTE! :love::love::love:

Looks like Grandis is a magnet even though he doesn't want to be, and this isn't helped by the fact that Nanoha and Fate takes every opportunity to amplify the effect. Settling down seems easier for Grandis now that he's gotten over his past.

MOAR HAYANDIS NAO!

Will tackle the backlog later. But for now, it's time to introduce the 'Prince'. ;)

~Rebuilt of~
~Grandis Lacetti~
http://i203.photobucket.com/albums/aa299/spec_operations/GrandisEdit2.jpg

Basic Stats:
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I know, I know. He's seemingly way different from the cocky and confident Grandis that we all knew from the past. But I just had to do this.:mad: I felt something missing every time I reread Grandis' old profile. And I found out that 'I wanted to do something very different'.:D The old Grandis was likeable, sure. But there was a degenerancy with him that bugged me. Like with Aurion, I intend to completely break apart the common character mold and even some of the tropes in order to get a result as uniquely my own as possible! And so, Ohji Grandis came to be.:) How often does the non-hotblooded cool guy get the main girl?:p Don't worry, he's just more (MUCH more) refined now. The interactions with Hayate later on will still entail the same roguish flair. And I'd have to apologize in advance if anybody is planning or my have already written anything that involves an "Ore" Grandis.:heh: This is how he is now. And I intend to make him as likeable a character as possible!:mad: Oh. And making HayateXGrandis a success is a must too. ><

Comments? He's much, MUCH less HAXX now compared to the old version. Though I'm open to some more suggestions. Thanks in advance.:)

EDIT: Added pic.:3

Ah, certainly a nice Rebuilt, and it's Aaron-esque in all its glory. :D

You've gone through him with me before, so I don't think there's anything else to add. He looks better than the previous profile, though I'm interested in Carim's admirer, Zamzeed. :p

And also ...

HAYANDIS! HAYANDIS! HAYANDIS!

*runs at ludicrous speed*

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OC time, I am dead. But happy since Raoh gonna get his own series! Weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!

-snip-

ZZZzzzzz tired. Brain is fried.

Ah, this is a nice summoner, and a close relationship with Caro to boot. :D The references to her summons are mostly myth-influenced ... but ARNGRIM? :eek: The crazy berserker with a huge cleaving sword from Valkyrie Profile? ... FINISHING STRIKE: FINAL BLAST!

*flees*

And luckily, Medusa's Gaze doesn't petrify, but I guess a mirror is still effective to turn the spell against Antigone and her comrades :uhoh:. Maybe she needs to bring a mirror herself :p.

New character.

Theme: ARRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR Pirates!

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ARRRR, PIRATES! :D:D

"Environmentalist" pirates is very original in concept, and Morgan certainly lives up to it. Attacking TSAB, though, is going to be worrying for Morgan :uhoh:. If he's not careful, he might have the Arc aimed at his ship :heh:

Diana Dornier

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Nice set of water-based abilities here, and she uses a whip to boot :D! And using her well-endowed assets for public relations, even better :D!

Walk on Water is a nifty movement spell, she basically glides on water streams, eh?

Supportive of Hayate's sekuhara antics? NIC--

*feels an evil aura of dreadfulness at the back*

Aaron: KISAMA! :frustrated::frustrated::frustrated:

:uhoh:

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^^; finally done with this damn scene.

Nice-to! Seeing the Wolkenritter, Hayate, and Aurion handling the Tempest is certainly a refreshing read to their more typical aerial combat. And Zafira even gets a non-shafted role in this :p.

I'm still wondering who the green-cloaked woman is ...

-snip-

:3

Yuunoko :love:! Why am I getting the feeling that by the end of the series, the two will hav-- No, erase that thought! But, Keroko having the hots for Yuuno and her awkwardness is delicious :D:D:heh:. And uhm, nearing the end, since the Spawn is kind of immune to magic, the mages won't be rendered to using conventionals, are they? :uhoh:

Pirate-y Erick is a nice touch for his personality! :) Not to mention the description of the previous hostility between the OFM and TSAB.

-snip-

I snicker at Kha's annoyance and protective nature, but never thought he'd be that protective of his waifu. Gravemind took the centerstage, though, with his tentacles-and-Spawn rampage. Guess Nanoha and company should start playing Starcraft and Halo to know their foes better :p.

Will bust backlog later; for now, this:

-snip-

Will post on the fanfic thread when Goose finishes the rewrite he's been doing for like... two weeks.

Now, the mystery deepens to unknown depths. What are Carim and Genya plotting for the Cleric-Knights, and why do they sound so sinister while at it? :eyespin::eyespin::eyespin:

The drama is building up nicely, and Vice finding Nanoha in a deplorable condition is a fitting end. :D

-snip-

This isn't the entire scene; the second half of scene 1 focuses on Hayate and Co.

This is one warm scene of reunion and gathering. Teana's current form is a bit startling (linked to Ariadne, perhaps?), but she's pulling through in her stride. Very nice!

*waits for the second scene to unfold*

P/S: By the way, it's ECG for electrocardiogram. :heh:

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It's been awhile. Almost feels strange to be posting profiles here again. :heh:

Starting off with the expanded Jack profiles is Jac.

-snip-

Huge BLUECHEESIUM of delicious profiles :D.

Jac certainly fits his Akabane Kurodo personality, though he's less scarier. :p And wonder, wonder, the leader cooks instead of the underlings. Nice touch! :D

The spells are good and complements his fighting style (luckily there's no energy daggers and Bloody Rain :p), but I don't really understand what Warding Swarm does. By "magical construct", does it mean things like barriers and the like, or things like devices, summoned creatures, etc.?

-snip-

Last profile. Revised and toned down to better fit what I think is a more accurate profile.

P.S:
I'm using the image as a visual reference only. It is in no way a port of the person howsoever. :p

Jac at first sounds like a bloodthirsty berserker, but on further read, he's quite the composed rogue :D. And one-sided love is a torment indeed.

I don't particularly see the use of drugs in his combat style, actually. Ravage seems quite capable to bring out the best in him. The wind magic is certainly put to good use by Jac. And picture association with Grimmjow fits very well. :D

-snip-

Well that took quite long. :rolleyes:

... :bow::bow::bow:

Gen Ealin is certainly one of the best written profiles (other than Katrina) ever. And it speaks of the darker side of the TSAB that's being exploited widely by us in the OC thread in a new light. The conflicts of attitude he suffered is a very good touch, especially since his involvement with the incident of the Book of Darkness and his finding out about the cover-up. The TSAB will have a tough time dealing with a rogue who knows of how they operate. Gen liking silence and nature is something I did not expect (I thought he'll be liking cold murder of TSAB members more :heh:).

Avatar certainly is an interesting Device with the capability to store Mana like spell cards. And the spell list is certainly nice to boot. Nothing in the region of HAXX, as far as I can tell. Overall, an extremely good character. TSAB should look out for their rears being kicked, now.

By the way, he's not the leader of the Prize, right ...? :uhoh:

Next two of the expanded Jack profiles, featuring Jas and Jec.

-snip-

Good grief, the gals are more notorious than the guys :p. Jas is notably the one they'd be calling "tsun", no doubt :D. The sisterhood with Jec is very nice. Relationship with Jag is foreseen to improve significantly, I say, even if they don't like each other much now :). Just hope that he's not at the receiving end of her bombardment spells in SLC mode :uhoh:.

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I'll leave the Jacks short and revised write up about the Prize for next time. The effort of revising Katrina's profile still looms though. :uhoh:

Mm, nice youngest sister :D. Pity the man who invoked the other Jacks' wrath :p. The spells are worked well, good job! :D Giant Round Shield made me go :eyespin: though. The range is huge, and it's very durable. But, seeing as she needed to use quite a number of her discs, it's all right. :D

I wonder what will happen if she found out that her family were killed by the Prize during their talent searching ... :uhoh:

ReBuild of Katrina? Nah..

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http://i223.photobucket.com/albums/dd217/mitsuki_tk/Katrina_R1.jpg

-snip-

Backstory explaining Katrina's link to Jail, as well as Quint and the Alphinos.

-snip-

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A placeholder for the revised version of the original profile. I got tired of referring to three separate posts for one profile and decided to make changes to the old one while I was at it.

A list of the changes.

- comestic changes to history
- reorganization of each section.
- rank fixed at S+
- Edited spells and added in some new ones.
- junking of conflicting spells such as AMF

Nice recap and cosmetic changes on Katrina's already rich history :D! As your main antagonist, she remains as able and as terrible as ever, and her enemies would find her a difficult foe to handle, no doubt. Katrina dances to the symphony of fire and ice as well. :)

Her partnership with Jail and involvement with Alpino and Quint is meshed appropriately. Her parting smile for Lutecia does warm the heart, somewhat, despite the cool and deadly exterior she often exudes. :)

Omigawd. :eyespin: You caught me with pants down after Aaron's bomb. :p

Can't help but say this is certainly one great read of an info dump. Not a dull moment in between the explanations and the character interactions inserted was great as well. =3

The backlog bluecheesium is a must after so long. I'm also enjoying a lot of stories and profiles that I've missed during my absence :heh:.

Thanks! :D

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Name: Evangeline "Tsurugi" Kamishiro
TSAB Rank: 1st Lieutenant
Gender: Female
Age: 22
Birthday: June 25 MC 053
Place of Birth: Administered Planet 58
Height: 172 cm
Weight: 52 kg
Eye Color: Lavender (floral)
Hair Color: Lavender (floral)
Mage Rank: A-
Magic Type: Neo-Belka
Magic Color: Purple
Magic Specialization: Physical
Combat Specialization: Close- and Mid-range Combat

Device Name: SaSword
Device Type: Armed
Device Primary Structure: Ninjato
Device Storage Form: Amethyst scorpion pendant
Device Appearance

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... One word to say it all: HAWT! :love::love::love:

Her history is sad, especially about the lost of her family. Her life is a roller-coaster ride, it seems, what with her being on the wrong side of law, and then integrated into the Bureau (why do I have a feeling that Project ZECT is a pet project of Jail Scaglietti? :uhoh: Fortunately it isn't :heh:). Luckily, her newfound friendship with Melissa provides her with a new perspective :nod:.

The Rider reference is ... :eyespin:.

Evangeline "Tsurugi" Kamishiro
Spells and Abilities

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There isn't anything wrong with the spells. I find them short and sweet. :)

Time for a little backstory on the Riders...

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Goodie! Ryotaro finally finds himself a rival in the form of Evangeline. I bet he'll find her more than a match for him :heh::heh::heh:. Nice touch on the project's background, didn't find much wrong there. :D

*peers out of the Sea of Dirac*

>_>

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*dives back into the Sea of Dirac*

I am cheering for Evangeline from this part of the world. Good going, girl! :D:D:D Serves the grunts right for messing with the Rider and their lieutenant :p. I wonder if they'll get more beating when they meet her in the main office later ... :p

GuardianS returns!! :bow: :bow:
Epic chapters as usual, PF :D. And a very interesting cliffhanger, too.

Thanks.

I think I should stop placing cliffhangers already, FieryAeon is mad at me. :heh:

Then again, I can't reveal everything now. Everything will come in time. Patience, patience. :p

Ah, finally got around to starting this...

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First mission to Non-administrated World #195 is tinged with both tension and mystery.

Seeing the references to Jail and the Grimoire (oh damn, the Lost Logia there isn't this one, right? Katrina will be there ...) and the Prize, I take it this is a collaborative writing between you and Tormenk? :D I wish the two of you the very best of luck for some awesome epicness :D.

And I guess Katrina isn't forgiving to being referred with affectionate names :p.

:)

:eyebrow:

:twitch:

:eek:

Wha...wha...WHAT IS THIS?!?!?!

Holy freakin' Lilith that's some EPIC Bluecheesium :eyespin: :eyespin: :eyespin:

I am soo jealous if your battle writing skillz :(. Very well done, indeed. [Teal'c]Indeed.[/Teal'c] Though I don't remember that part where the 5th one died...:upset:

Thanks! :heh:

My battle scripts are average, I think. It drains a lot of brain power to write them, and so production was stalled for a long time >_<. Guess a lot of us aren't set to write intense battle drama. Your short on Evangeline fits just nicely, so no need to be jealous. :D

And the fifth one being dead was actually mentioned indirectly several times in the course of the story, just that it isn't as specific. Let's see if anyone can spot it. :heh:

Arthas, the Lich King...has fallen.

The terror that resided in Northrend has been defeated...or so they thought.

As the old saying goes: "Behind every great man is a great woman."

A new threat has arisen.

World of Warcraft
Wrath of the Lich Queen

Prepare to be...befriended

*RUNS AT LUDICROUS SPEED*

:uhoh:

PF: Eto ... nice to meet you, Lich Queen ...

Lich Queen: *rattling breath* Nice to meet you, too ... You'll be my partner ... *Lich Queen rushes to embrace PF*

At the end of the day, the hollow winds of the blizzard whispered tales of the magnificent bird trapped in a crystalline prison of ice, never to be seen in the world again.

So if that's the green Tiberium...what's the rarer, unstable Tiberium? :uhoh:

Bluecheesium? :eyespin::eyespin::eyespin:

*runs at ludicrous speed*

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Hey there guys, what's up?

Looks like I'm going back to the craziness that is the OC thread. Anyway, didn't want to come empty-handed, so here's a little something....

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No color on dialogue, but I think I did okay....:heh:

Anyway, I have to go now, do my homework, later.

:eek::eek::eek:

Looks like this is getting darker every chapter. All the good guys seem to have fallen to their foes. And Satoshi ... found out about his true self :uhoh:.

PhoenixFlare

2008-05-18, 07:40

... Character limit is prohibiting a single-post backlog breaker :(.

So ... ANOTHER MAXIMUM BACKLOG BREAKER!!

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Right, here's a story from this morning... It was 5:50am, and i woke up to the urge of nature. visited the bathroom, and when i returned, inspiration was waiting with a nailed bat and wanted some dues for me not writing in the last 5 years...

...and nailed me good. now, 10 hours later, i'm posting the prologue chapter of what might actually develope into something interesting :p

May contain adequate amounts of "lol WUT!?" but please bear with me.

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there, 4100 words. Comments?

Urge of nature that does wonder. :p

Davram sure upped his ante as one of the master wizards in the world, though he was eventually being overwhelmed by the Order of Light. And that Sealing Logia seems to be doing its job nicely ... until it reappeared in the world again, deep underground :uhoh:.

Nice opening chapter :D.

First off, thanks to everyone who read and commented, and ofc thanks to PhoenixG and Aaron008R for beta-reading this.

Right, so after some serious writers blocks to the face, i finally got the chapter 2 together. It's a bit heavy, atleast at the beginning. I also attached some pictures that i managed to find.

Anyway, 5500 words. Enjoy! :D

Chapter 2: The Tower

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There, comments?

Edit: thought to add a link to the first chapter: Prologue (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=1523941#post1523941)

It's alive! It's alive! The Tower's alive! In the form of a small girl!

Davram's nonchalance is certainly a great work, though his image as a lich is getting worrisome. He's so kind :p! And a mean streak of giving surprises when you least expect it. :heh:

Guess Iris still has much to learn about her master. Rule #1: Don't assume that he's asleep if he seems like it. :p

Well, in celebration to OCT's birthday:
Another chapter! sorry it took a while. :heh:
Again, thanks to PhoenixG and Aaron008R for beta-reading! :D

To everyone who read, thanks alot, couldn't be doing this without you guys and gals. I read everyone's comments even though i might not have responded to them, i also tried to make it a bit more clear to avoid needless confusion. But if i didn't succeed in that, then i suppose that confusion is just a part of my personality. :heh:

links to chapters 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=1523941#post1523941) and 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=1541063#post1541063).

About formatting: Davrams lines are always preluded by an empty line, and i usually don't have another empty line afterwards. But when i have two people talking and neither TALKS LIKE THIS, i use empty lines to indicate that the person who's talking has changed.

anyway, around 5500 words like the last chapter as well, here it is:
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Comments?

Time sure flies fast for undead and literal demigods :p.

Iris's ursophilia impulse is a nice touch, but poor teddy that got punched! :heh:

And lo and behold, another bear joins the rank, and one that gets off rather well with Iris, in this case. Ursus should be advised caution with Iris, she bites. :heh::D

A nice title for this, as Tormenk put it, would be The Lich, the Tower, and the Bear! :joke:

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And PF delivers his massively long BLUECHEESE!

That is a mighty impressive piece o' work, though. Nicely written. My head's still wobbling :heh:

This one is much shorter in comparison, and yeah, I notice myself getting some the throb when I re-read it back. Yuuno went the roundabout way to talk about it, and I made him made it even more difficult. :eyespin::heh:

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Oh, epic information chapter.

The whole religionbabble by Yuuno, strangely reminds me of the Wicker Man. (( I know, BIG difference, but still. ))

This is the first time I've ever heard of an information chapter that's epic. :heh:

I haven't watched Wicker Man, so the reference eludes me. :heh:

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Well, you know my thoughts already and here is a little joke from yours truly. :heehee:
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Omigawd! This omake is certainly giving me the epic :eyespin::eyespin::eyespin:! The mere thought is exacting a wicked throb of unbelievable intensity at the imagination of Iris being the sire of the buildings. :eyespin::eyespin::eyespin:

*douses self in bleach to cleanse the mind*

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Hmm funny, it looks like you managed to edit the thing that I was going to comment on yesterday in here…. Or maybe I was just tired and read it wrong :heh:

I did find the above quote a little weird… although it is explainable if the templars came from different backgrounds/etc. before their appointment. Nay? Yay?

Looks like it isn’t all just roses on the ‘villains’ side. Should be good… apart from the imminent expansion of the main cast :uhoh: :rolleyes:

I'm sorry that I didn't get back to this sooner, guess I miss what you meant by the edit. I didn't edit much except for the cosmetics (adding colors and italics and such), so it should still be there. What was it about, by the way (if you still remember, in any case :heh:)?

The question was actually meant to ask the reader what they think caused so many scars on Grandia, actually :heh:. It didn't work out well, but never mind. The Templars were trained together and much of their histories were known to each other. It's like they had been companions for a very long time that everyone knew everyone else from the inside out, except if they were hiding something.

And yeah, the roses aren't always blooming for the villains :heh:. Sometimes they get poison ivy instead. :)

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XD you go ARF! Horray for the shafted ones :p Points to Vivio for the scene with all the things she manages to pull. Upstaging the Aces *chuckle*

Although best would have to be XD Much laughter was had yesterday :D Many thanks

On the Leona side of things, I demand a joint inquisition of her by Aurion and Yuuno. XD

:heh::heh::heh: I didn't know Arf was shafted, but luckily that pulled through rather well. I'm glad you like this scene :D.

Vivio grows up to be quite a rascal in this fic, but she's still a responsible girl under Nanoha's guidance. Yuuno gives his share of "parentage" also, as you've noticed :p.

Joint inquisition ... :uhoh:

Leona: *eyes glinting coldly* Don't even think about it.

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Oh yes, the defection is imminent…

Defection? The probability is rather low. :p

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You continue to impress, this time with knowledge of linguistics and Myths + Legends, very cool :bow: However must you always leave us at cliffs that are hanging :frustrated:

Thanks! :D

But, cliffhangers are ... necessary. And more's coming :uhoh:.

*flees*

Ahh, I see a variation on grenade jumping. Well it makes sense :heh: Don't worry so much about explaining the other comments raised. I'm perfectly happy to sit and wait for things to be explained in the story. Of course if that's not true then that's a different matter entirely :heh:

Is that the term? I didn't really know. :heh: And yeah, it's going to be explained in the next chapter.

Although it does seem to me that we have epic haxx on the 'good guys team' with what Leona threw out in the chapter... Perhaps not so devasting in property damage :heh: but still powerful none the less :heh:

You mean Nidhoggr or her ability to sense Vestrell's move? The latter will be explained later, but right now, Nidhoggr is actually just a more flashy variation of the typical battery spell, it has speed and range, but little in power (B+ for the whole spell).

One more falls. Or at least is now a literal vegetable :uhoh:

Uhm, half a vegetable. :uhoh: And quite a bad half, too. :uhoh::uhoh:

He takes the first scene of Chapter Nine. :heh:

Suitably epic nuke from our resident grand story teller XD

I still can't shake the feeling that the templars are going to end up on the good side by the end of this. Although it's debateable how many of them are still going to be alive by it's conclusion.

Thanks!

Well, it's good that we're now second-guessing what the plot will end up with (my intention, exactly), because it makes it more interesting (and more difficult for me to write the plot :heh:). I'm just hoping I can pull the big one later.

Now to sit for another month or so to wait for the next installment, the aftermath. *sigh* :heh:

Ahhh, I really need to work on my fics sometime... Now if only I had a time machine :D

Another Transition chapter is coming up first, and then the next chapter. When it'll be done, though, may take more than a month. :heh:

Yeah I figured :heh:

No, and I went the extra mile to make it seem so! :(:heh:

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Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha TravellerS

The Wheel of Time turns, and Ages come and pass,
leaving memories that become legend.
Legend fades to myth, and even myth is long forgotten
when the Age that gave it birth comes again.

What was, what will be, and what is,
May yet fall under the Shadow

Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha TravellerS will now begin.

Chapter 1 (The Eye of the World) – Prologue
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Mighty interesting start :D. I think you're the first author who's attempted time-traveling for Nanohaverse, which is set to bring about epic stories and battles. Shamal keeping a regular log is not really out-of-character, seeing as she's basically the doctor and healer of the group, she needs to know the conditions of her friends and set some check-ups and prognoses if necessary. Logging Nanoha's conditions is quite correct :).

The second prophecy seems dire enough, seeing as it involves even the age of the Saint King three hundred years ago. Nanoha receiving the second Linker Core sounds a bit strange for me, but I don't mind it very much. It will be interesting development to watch out for. :D

For OCs, I think I've mentioned it already that most of mine wouldn't fit, except for Gabriel who's working in Intelligence. See if you need another Intelligence other than Acous, and we'll discuss this out. If your story revolves heavily around the ancient age, then it's all right.

Good luck with this! :D

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Oh, AARON!!!

Here's a new competitor for overreactions here! *waves*

Overreactions are for the masters of underreactions. :p

*cough*

If it gets that far without me burying him alive in critique ;)

Though I trust that won't happen, Cadians are VERY resilient.

Most, not all. Then again, if he breaks, I trust you won't make him break ... that badly.

As expected. I like Big Bosses that are less...stifling, though. Still, I like Lazarus, and his boss. The dynamics is very familiar to me.

He's stifling because he pays no heed to things that do not concern him. Anything that does, he pays every ounce of attention to it. Other than that, you'll just be talking to the wall until he decides that he's bored and your tummy needs a make-over :p.

Really now, that's nice of you...:D

*absorbs information*

Petty thief! :p

Use it if you want, though. I don't mind anyone using it as well. :)

I'm a little too tired to start breaking the backlog now, or whatever there is before this post.

So I'll post first, and come back tomorrow for some more.

As I said on the IRC, here's 3 drafts. Still open to suggestions, manhandling, slamming, you know the drill.

COMING SOON: Some background information so some things aren't so confusing OR nearly as h4xx as they sound now. Funny thing that I wrote the text before the Foreword. It should be called the Back-word instead now. But since this is more transcribed in my head, and less documented elsewhere, I felt it was important that I put this down first before I start forgetting things, my next post will tell you why I need to do this.

Ergo, the background is recorded elsewhere other than here, so I can whip it out more easily.

:upset:

Firstly, we shall have a villain, and then a true neutral dead guy.

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Now, the histories of these three characters are well-done, I find little to nitpick (even though I feel the "eternal life" part a little unnerving, but I'll just leave it be for the moment). I do have issues with the spells, as I've mentioned to you earlier, so let's see what do we have to talk about.

Ah, wait, before that, we'll tackle this little bit here:

One notable event from his time as a cadet was a duel with another cadet from the Seven Lances, Juste Beremont, which would later come to be hailed as the “Duel of the Century”. It was during this fight that the two were distinguished as among the best war strategists of their generation, and also resulted in his leapfrog from Magic Grid 3 to Magic Grid 5, because of the limits to which the battle pushed both him and his opponent.

Their battle lasted a total of 45 minutes, and eventually ended in Juste’s victory by what he called “a 3mm difference in arm length”. It wasn’t wrong: The last strike both of them dealt was a blade strike, and Juste won only on merit of his longer reach, and a better blade technique, which was a fraction of a second faster.

Juste Beremont would later go on to become known as the Exile Forgemaster, while Zarakiya would be working with him as the capitol, or captain, of the “Arcus Civitas” during the Aerternis Proxy Wars, and the eventual Dimensional War.

If Juste won the duel, why is Zarakiya made the leader and not him? =3

General Fighting and Magic Style:

(The lack of sigils is because the Aerternis don’t really use them. Instead, they generate weapons using magic that have “runes” on them detailing the nature and strength of the spell. Those are “replacements” for sigils.)

To my understanding, this would follow a similar rule as Tracing (in your case, the Artifacts of the God), wouldn't it?

Veneficus Radix: The Root of Magic

Like some high-ranking Aerternis, he seems to have an unlimited supply of magic, simply because they do not need Linker Cores as accumulators and processes; rather, their bodies have been evolved to accept magic in its rawest form from the source, and thus they seem to have an inexhaustible amount of magic on hand, uninhibited by the varying capacities of the Linker Core. This also means that he is able to draw any form of magic from around him in a certain radius. For Zarakiya, this radius’ limit is 100 metres.

Of course, there are limiting factors to this ability, which are quite costly.

The first is a condition known as “Veneficus Terminus” or the “Magic’s Limit”: This is the amount of magic the body can withstand at any one time before it comes under severe pressure from the magic itself. It must and can never be exceeded by the user of the Veneficus Radix. If it is exceeded, then the user will immediately face rapid degeneration of his or her body, which will result eventually in death if the user does not drop below the limit. Needless to say, in Zarakiya’s case, this ceiling value is very high, and in practical application, he may not be the match of an Ace in the short term (he has a lower output at any given time), but due to the different working style of his magic (he has a higher overall endurance), he is stronger in the long run, as the Aces will run dry of energy much earlier than he will.

The second is an affliction that seems only to affect more powerful Aerternis who use the Radix, and it is called the “Inritus Presencia” or “Void Effect” Once an Aerternis chooses the path of the Radix, they lose their immortality, and as they continue to progress, their bodies will degenerate and eventually be broken down into magical energy themselves.

Not all Aerternis are aware of this, but Zarakiya is aware of this fact, and of the fact that he has not long left, only *snip* years in his own estimation. It is unknown why Zarakiya chose this path, though, knowing that it would kill him.

If you don't mind me pointing out, your characters (two of the three) have a lot of special abilities that are mitigated very little for the huge benefits they gain. Well, they're antagonists, you've mentioned them earlier, but it remains difficult to see how the Aces are able to handle them.

For starters, Veneficus Terminus doesn't sound like a powerful limitation in any case, given that the Zarakiya's threshold is quite high. I believe you'll be exercising author limitation here.

For Inritus Presencia, from what I understand, it means that they're no longer immortal, so ... what's the consequence here other than they becoming human? Does that mean that the average Aerternis who doesn't practice actually do not die normally, and that if struck a lethal blow, they can be regenerate very rapidly? What I mean is, what's so crippling about this effect to Zarakiya's unnatural ability?

Vesica Silva: The Blade Forest

Offensive Power: A+ each sword
Type: AoE Blast
Activation: “Rumpus orbis (Shatter the Circle (referring to the world))!”
Cast Time: 6.5 seconds
Terminus taken: 90% + Extra Drain

Gathers thousands upon thousands of energy blades around him, and launches them outward, together with a huge magical shockwave. The swords dissipate 6-7 seconds after being fired, but this is still a very deadly move, as they are shot out at speeds exceeding most other shooting spell speeds.

In this case, he will drain his Axiom’s power by 50% at one shot, thus lowering his combat effectiveness (like speed, strength, and reaction times) by half, and also lowering the upper limit of his Terminus by 50% for an entire day. Also, he will be incapable of using magic for about an hour after using this spell.

This is his deadliest spell, and is called the “Army Slayer” because of its massive killing ability. In fact, some of the massive anti-army, one sided slaughters that occurred during the Proxy Wars were attributed to this skill due to the sheer rapidity of the massacres, which would have been completely impossible to achieve even with another larger force. However, it is more or less a last ditch assault-type spell, given its heavy physical and mental drain, and he has not used this since a certain incident during the Proxy Wars.

You have a complex input for your spells, and one of them is Axiom, which isn't mentioned in extra details. So, for the Aerternis that practice magic, they basically have a Veneficus Terminus and Axiom that function as power supplies for their spells? How different are they that they are needed at different times and usage?

Secundus Lancea – Anglachel

Tier: 6 (Artifact of the Gods)
Power: E~???
Proficiency: E – Zarakiya cannot use this spell properly.
Type: Ceremonial/Close Combat
Activation: The Command Runes of “Metal”, “Earth”, “Fire” and “Wind”

A lance said to be able to cut through anything. Zarakiya has only once before attempted the use of this spell (albeit out of combat), and the result was that the negative feedback from its power caused almost all the bones in his arms to break. However, even a failed attempt like Zarakiya’s almost destroyed the pocket dimension in which he was training, and thus one can only conclude that it must be a very powerful weapon.

Tertius Lancea – Cronus Flax: Sickle of Cronus

Tier: 6 (Artifact of the Gods)
Power: D~???
Proficiency: E – Zarakiya only knows how to wield it as a weapon.
Type: Ceremonial/Close Combat
Casting Time: Absolutely ZERO
Activation: Unknown, even to Zarakiya?!

The Third Lance. It is not known how Zarakiya possesses more than one of the Seven Lances, and stranger yet that he has no idea how this weapon works.

Uhm, right, a lance that can "cut through anything". By virtue of description, I'm assuming it means the lance can cut anything including space, universe, time, and the like. Proficiency, like casting time and power, is pretty much subjective and author limited, so if he really needs to use it, then he will use it. Now, can you describe a way in which the lance can be effectively blocked?

... I dread to think what Cronus Flax can do ...

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There isn't much to comment about Juste, because it lacks information :p.

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For Ricardo ...

Kropp av Blod: Body of Blood

His clan-based ability: So long as Rick has at least 35% of his Terminus available for use without hitting 100%, any serious physical wound to his body will simply cause that part of him to meltdown into a huge pool of blood, and then rise again shortly with only minimal damage down. This way, he can reduce even a fatal wound to a long gash. However, this does have a negative effect on him, in the sense that the subsequent reduced injury takes a very long time to heal (almost double the time), and cannot be healed effectively by healing spells: All healing spells drop to about 5% of their normal effectiveness when dealing with such injuries. Another ability included in the Body of Blood is the ability to heal himself using the blood of his enemies. The limitation is that this healing does not work on wounds inflicted and reduced using the first half of this ability, and only has a limited mitigation effect on other kinds of wounds. Also, the amount of blood required for healing is quite a lot, one would have to do a lot of major bloodletting to heal serious wounds.

Thus, this ability does not make him invincible, it simply makes him harder to kill off. Rick normally relies more on speed to keep himself safe, and some powerful spells to make him dangerous.

There is, however, a very inconvenient side effect of this spell: That he cannot retain a very active lifestyle for extended periods of time, due to the fact that being active, whether during the day or the night, wears out his energy. Also, he appears to suffer from a bad case of everlasting insomnia: He cannot sleep normally no matter what he tries (36 sleeping pills and 3 knockout blows later, he was very much unharmed except for a major headache and a somewhat worsened temper). Thus, in order to function properly, he has to from time to time seal himself into a near-death sort of sleep. This near-death sleep involves the use of magic to completely shut down his body, with a timer set to ‘wake’ him up at the point where he is able to function again, which normally takes about half of the time that he was active. For example, if he was awake for about a week, then his sleep will last three days (rounded down). During this point of time, he cannot react to external stimuli in the least, which means he can be killed while still in this state of sleep. Overall, the maximum amount of time he can remain active without needing this form of sleep is about 2 weeks, although he sleeps more regularly than that, so as to prevent the worst case scenario from ever occurring.

Let's see, if someone critically damages his heart/weak point, will it just "gush" out in a pool of blood and then repair itself like nothing's ever happened?

Ödslig Tom: Desolate Void

Rick’s black jacket was never as innocuous as it looked: it is actually a link to an endless void; the remnants of a major dimensional fallout of unknown origin. This appears to be a special item belonging to him and not so much an ability rather than an artifact. By taking off his jacket and flicking it out at a enemy spell, he can absorb the attack into the void. He can also pull just about anything else he wants into this void, though it is possible to resist its effect by setting up a barrier or a field, or by moving out of its effective range.

Anything within up to 90 metres radius of the void can feel its pull (and outside of it, to a lesser extent), friend and foe, animate and inanimate objects alike. Its minimum radius was 15 metres, which means that Rick himself would feel this force, and would have had to counter it using magic as well. Therefore, it can be both a blessing, and a curse.

Also, Rick cannot use this ability more than once a day, as it seems to weaken him physically and mentally to use this. Maybe he just wasn’t cut out to use it…

Mm, I wonder, can he use this secret artifact to basically void Arc-en-Ciel?

Also, if he can only use it once per day, how long is the duration that the jacket will remain as a void before it reverts to being a normal jacket? Sorry, by "once per day", it can either mean "activated once and effective till one day is over" or "activated once and effective only for one attack per day". I do hope it's the latter ...

Hus Daeva: The House of Daeva

Boost Power: A
Special Boost: A+
Type: Hybrid Boost
Activation: None
Cast Time: Unknown

This spell is an interesting one, it not only boosts his movement and attack speed, but it also ups his charm and charisma, in the sense that he has the power to attract and sway the emotions of others in a subtle fashion, similar to the effect of pheromones. The physical and offensive boost is quite weak as compared to that of his other spells, but the “Special” boost lies in the PR/IP skill boost that he receives, and this the defining trait of the skill “House of Daeva”. When used by Ricardo, this spell can serve the purpose of letting him get where he wants, and do as he likes.

There are few who can resist this spell, as there are yet fewer who can detect its presence in the first place, and this is usually because they are resistant to advances in that direction in the first place, or because they are oblivious to them. There have been suggestions that Ricardo uses this to “make up for his lack of waking time” by enhancing the effectiveness of his more…intriguing interpersonal interactions. This, however, has always been hotly denied by him (evident from the slightly more harsh tone he uses), although without losing his cool.

Mm, silent killer, much? Hayate falls under the pheromone, backstab, end of story?

Hus Gangrel: The House of Gangrel

Boost Power: S+
Type: Hybrid Boost
Activation: None
Cast Time: Unknown
Duration: 10 minutes maximum

This is the most powerful of his boosts. It increases his Berhaska passive skill, boosts his endurance and his speeds to higher levels than any one of his other boosts. The most straightforward of his boost spells, and with the most straightforward cost: He goes outright mad for the whole duration of this boost, and while in this state he fights instinctively and on greatly increased reflexes and speeds, he also loses a lot of his proper coherent thought process, inflicting damage mercilessly on both friend and foe alike.

In short, he fights like a beast rather than a man. Also, his spell list is more limited when Hus Gangrel is in use, as he cannot use more powerful/complex spells like Crimson Dream and Blood Refrain Rondo.

Ten minutes is quite the long duration for normal battles. They usually last less than five, unless it's a battle of attrition or a siege. Consider lowering the time limit?

Natt Uvertyr: Night’s Overture

Defensive Power: S~S+
Proficiency: AAA+
Type: Disruption/Field type Defense
Activation: “Resonate!”
Cast Time: 4 seconds
Duration: As long as he can hold it up

Ricardo uses both his hands to play an illusory melody in the air as though playing a huge pipe organ, and using this melody, generates ripples tinged with a deep red aura over a wide diameter of almost 200 metres, with lesser effects outside of it.

These ripples have a similar effect to that of the Crimson Dream, except that it also entails causing the enemy’s magic power to dissipate/disperse faster, thus weakening most attacks used against him by quite a great deal. Thus, this move is not an attack against the power of the spell, but against the structural integrity of the magic particle construct that makes up the concept of this spell.

Maximum level of spells that can be dispersed?

Demonen Slottet: Demon Castle

Tier: Six (Citadel of Hell)
Power: Variable
Proficiency: S+
Type: Field/Wide Area/Summon
Activation: “I am A. Ricardo, the master of Castle Cronqvist.”
Cast Time: 2 hours
Duration:

Ricardo summons a huge castle with a maze of rooms and towers, with him at an unknown location known as the Castle Keep, which is actually a localized dimensional rift which cannot be touched until the castle itself is destroyed. Through this castle, Ricardo has near-infinite access to summons of monsters and creatures which he can summon to either defend or attack. These creatures are split into 5 levels of power. Level 1 summoned beings are so comparatively weak that even the average TSAB mage can take almost a dozen of these before going down (although they make good scouts, and they can be summoned en masse to simply swarm said TSAB mage and thus minimize losses), while the mighty Level 5 beings are more than a match for entire units of mages.

Ricardo can also obtain intelligence from whatever the summoned beings are able to see, which means that they are also like a major extension of his passive sight (active sight means that he is able to things first hand, while passive sight means he knows what’s happening. Much like Naruto’s mass-spam Kage-bunshin no jutsu in some ways)

The limitations of this is that it, like some powerful Aerternis spells, throws open the magic gate(for such another spell, see the Blade Forest, Zarakiya’s AoE attack), and thus drains his Axiom at a much more rapid rate than normal spells, of which the magical strain is regulated by said item. An analogy for the drain method is that in normal spells, the magic that flows through him is regulated, while in this spell, the magic flows as much as needed instead of in a regulated fashion, and thus this is like his major limit break of sorts.

The price of this spell is similar to that of Axiom-draining spells: Firstly, it can only be held up for a limited period of time, which in Ricardo’s case is 2 hours, and following that, his Axiom will be rendered at half its original efficiency. Within that period of time, he can summon as much as he likes, and also, he can invest magical energy into beings that he summons through the Cronqvist family castle, which allows them to continue to exist for a limited time even when the duration of this spell is over. Secondly, while there is no given limit on the number of Level1-3 summons he can bring out, there is a cap on how many level 4 and 5 creatures he can summon. In the case of level 4s, he can only summon nine of them, while for level 5 creatures, he can only summon three. Lastly, he will go into a state of death-like sleep like that of Blood Body’s side effect for 2 days once he is done using this spell (this spell is like draining all of his energy for 4 days, and then forcing him to rest), and this leaves him wide open to attack.

Now, I frown at this spell. It's too powerful. I notice that the cast time is two hours, but preparations beforehand effectively render the cast time obsolete (plus, it's plot point, anyway). Then, it seems like Ricardo has some godly amount of Axiom to spare for this spell to be maintained for two hours, and the summon limit is almost nonexistent. Personally, if I were Ricardo, I'd mass-spam Level 1-3 creatures and let them flood over the enemies. It's a futile battle on the enemy's side anyway, since there's no limit to the number that he can summon for those small level creatures. Plus, if he were to combine all the summons, he'd basically have an army huge enough to overwhelm the enemy's forces. Of course, that's assuming that those creatures do not drain his Axiom when summoned (something which you'd accidentally let out, perhaps). If they do drain his Axiom, he'd not have an infinite summon for Level 1-3.

So anyway, my long delayed...preview is here. It's split into 3 parts, and involves some OCs I haven't posted yet (it's still on paper manuscript) so it could get confusing.

First person view. Third person can wait for the real stuff.
First try writing a Nanoha fic, so...oh well, nevermind.

Zenith of Eternity
Part I: The Wings of the Storm

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And...some sleep at last. AFTER this gets on the Fanfic thread. Oh well.

For starters, this is quite epic even for a first chapter. :D

There's the sense of mystery over who Alemantas's true identity (and the one who spoke in her dream), and then the person who called her ... mother? :uhoh: Nice biking scene between Snake and Acous, though I'm still wondering who did Acous meet in the office (doesn't sound like Regius). A lot of codenames are being used, it seems. And the mastermind is already revealed :p.

Alright. I'm fully in love with this series now...

Why, you saying you weren't in love with it until now? I'm hurt! :joke:

Thanks! :D

Excellent work indeed. The group fights are nicely done...and that girl is SCARY. I'm gonna try praying that that ship of theirs is in one piece

(although I'm secretly hoping it's in many, many pieces :p)

*runs from Angry Aaron*

Uhm, Escutcheon is a building, and the Crusader is a big room where the operations are being overseen. They haven't deemed it necessary to commission a mobile base, yet. :D

That girl ain't scary, she's cute and innocent!

and I'm all the more determined to make mine as EPIC.

Great, more epic stuff is always good. :D

:twitch::twitch::twitch::twitch::twitch::twitch::t witch::twitch:

The...lines are nice...

The action was cool...

The couple's move was so Sora and Nike...

I feel for S-Sharazad...

And I think there's...something about Leona...

BUT!

BUT! BUT! BUTTTTT!!!!!!

NOOOOOOOOOO------TRYSTAHN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
YOU'RE MY FAAAAVVVVOOORRRRIIITTTTEEEE TEMPLARRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
YOOOOOUUUUUUUUU CAN'T DDDDDDDIIIIIEEEEEE HHHEEEEEERRRRREEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!

...

DAMN YOU PF!~

:frustrated::frustrated::frustrated::frustrated::u pset::upset::upset::upset:

:twitch::twitch::twitch:

The response is so strong ... :uhoh:

I didn't get the reference about Sora and Nike (though I know it's from Kingdom Hearts :heh:), but I'm amazed that your favorite Templar is Trystahn of the four being detailed so far. He has the least amount of exposure at current time, but I guess he makes people feel for him (perhaps more so after this ... :uhoh:). Thanks! :D

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Hell yeah. You should definitely give the series a watch. I LOVE the ED. Imagine Vivio having to live with Noland acting eerily similar to Kogarashi.

-snip-

Oh good god, what do we have here? :eyespin::eyespin::eyespin:

Maid Guy Sight? Everything's see through? :eyespin: The girls aren't safe anymore with this stalker in town!

I wonder if Noland sees even through Nanoha, Fate, and Hayate ... what a lucky maid. :uhoh:

Ahh I knew it was good to wait until the weekend. Much more active.

Alrighty folks. This here is the revised character.

-snip-

If everyone approves, this will be also be the official working version. ...Until next revision, at least. I hope it's acceptable; I'll make some fancy dedicated post thing for linkage and reference later.

Mm, Noland the Knight of Calamari Culinary. :joke:

I prefer this profile, it's much revised and is more balanced than the previous one. And no Maid Guy Sight ability, I see. :heh:

Good work with this! :D

Ya know, every time I read this over I can't help but think about Patchu-con! Defend the Library!

But in any case...

Inspired in a way by Keroko and me being too damn restless at times, I've done my own version of the fall of Belka. Of course, this is only another interpretation of what may or may not have happened so long ago.

-snip-

Next, we have the secretive Priory of Ioudas who protects the last of the scriptures bearing the true story of the incident, which the current Church condemns as heresy. However, according to revelation by inside sources, the Priory is poised to reveal the entire truth to the public, and the Church puts up desperate measures to counter that event. They track down members of the Priory, whose secret codename was Viva la Vivio and carrying two gems of different colors (one red, the other green) linked in the shape of brooch. A number were killed, and the last descendant of the royal Belkan family is in danger of assassination (as if they could, the Armor of the Saint King makes her invincible).

Now, the story begins with one learned man searching for the truth ... Yuuno Scrya, with his lifelong partner Nanoha Takamachi.

History is about to be remade ...

:uhoh:

*flees*

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W00t! Stuff posting time!!

It's been a while! :heh:

First things first!

Thanks to the nice people of the Image Thread I was finally able to change the TSAB Logo on Rinya's ID Card to the AAS one.

http://img366.imageshack.us/img366/1516/nanoidrinyaaasuo6.jpg

I already replaced it in her profile.

I'm also glad I decided to take a break from my main story (I pretty much stuck) and wrote something for my Dark Setting.

-snip-

It's the longest Dark Setting Chapter so far.

Thanks to Keroko and Xgouki for letting me use thier OCs!
I hope I got them right.
Sorry if not! I'm unworthy!
:bow::bow::bow::bow::bow::bow:

And we have another picture! :D

I always wanted to draw something for my Dark Future Setting and I decided on a name for it and wanted to make some kind of 'Poster'.

Thanks again to Keroko and Xgouki who gave thier input for the fanpictures I draw of thier OCs. (Yes guys I finally finished it!)

So here it is:
Showing both main heros and all Dark Generals! :3
http://img138.imageshack.us/img138/1089/mglnnightfalllf2.jpg

:eek::eek::eek:

This is serious stuff, a dark future where Nanoha is lost, Vivio is battling against foes who are previous allies, and new characters rallying behind her. EPIC! :D

And don't tell me Hel is ... HAYATE?! :eek::eek::eek: Gosh, this is heart-gripping, Kyral, you need to write faster! :D

Rinya's ID and the little poster are EPIC pics in their own right! Great work, wish I have this photoshopping ability. :(

Just a little bit, though. I remember the last entry you written was about Elric wanting to apologize to Rinya, now how did this crop up so suddenly? Time jump? :eyespin::eyespin::eyespin:

Wait!
I thought they died!? But they never have!?
You played with my innocent heart! ;.;
(ok... and that's from the guy who killed nanoha off screen >.> )

Sorry, but I just have to do it. :p

And ... who killed Nanoha offscreen?

Oh, you ...

BASTARD! :frustrated::frustrated::frustrated:

:joke:

Ah... that's what I call a fun read :D

Thank you, I appreciate your reading it. Hopefully, it's not too tiresome for the eyes. :heh:

Sadly two things cought my eye...
*drops a big, ancient and ornamented on the table and opens it.*

Frieren Fesseln (Frozen Shackles)!

Ah... while your translation is correct in a way. Frieren is something like "feeling cold" if you say "ich friere" it means pretty much "I feel cold".
But if you want to use it for an object... like frozen water... you use "gefrohren"
"Gefrohrene Fesseln" would be perfect! :)

<Warnung, Herrin. Feind kommend (Warning, Mistress. Enemy approaching).>

Ah yes... I feel like back in A's hearing: "Gegenstand kommt nah." (wich was translated with "approaching Target", but in reality means "object comming closer")

I would suggest: "Feind nähert sich.

Ah, Master Belka Scriptor, you're an absolute savior! :bow::bow::bow:

I literally filched Wyrd's warning from dictionary, I'll edit that, thanks! :D

Frozen Shackles, however, come from manga translation, so I'll just leave it be. :heh: Thanks for the pointers, though! :)

After I remade Rinya's ID Cardm I had the idea to make some improvements to Elric.

I replaced the two pictures of his Device in Range Mode and Sealed Mode with a single picture, like I did with Rinya's Device.

http://img98.imageshack.us/img98/7664/elriccarnagexr1.jpg

I also added two new pictures to help visualize some details of my character.

http://img388.imageshack.us/img388/644/carnagefingersfz2.jpg
The armoured segments of the fingers are claw like, but can be retracted to allow manipulation of objects without scratching or piercing them.

http://img131.imageshack.us/img131/6448/elricdrinknj1.jpg
Elric bandages his forearm to hide Carnages veins.

And I must say, this picture I found in the Image Thread pretty much fits my Dark Future Setting :3
http://i207.photobucket.com/albums/bb63/Shinzantetsu1/Nanoha%20III/mono-nano108b.jpg

This is GAWD!! :twitch:

:eek::eek::eek:

AWESOME PICTURES! And you drew them yourself too ... MADNESS! :p

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Exprozion! A captivating read as always. :D I was expecting infernals, but a good old rain of rock works just fine for the occasion. It even took out the ley node the base was sitting on.

I grinned at the idea that a Sunstrider has survived to this day. :3

The plot thickens, and you're nowhere done. To the next scene!

Rain of rock? Ley node? :eyespin:

You always find holes to insert the least amount of your brand into it, ne? Not that I mind. :D

And I guess you found the reference for Sunstrider. :heh:

Yup AOE breaks stealth. And nice theme there; certainly fit the mood. :3

:bow::bow::bow::bow:

Once again, another amazing episode of great Justice! All that magic really tore the arena to shreds. :p

And while it was gratuitiously over the top, given the nature of things they were up against, I expected no less. :nod:

This further reinforces the theory that TSAB is frankly, not much of a administrator of Time Space as a whole. Not enough power density to able to exert control.

:heh:

I've been wanting to use the theme for quite some time now.

And thanks!

The place is literally a wasteland already, so more damage wouldn't matter much. :p

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I think I miss a few along the way, going through 200+ pages isn't exactly easy. Sorry about that. Do give me a nudge if I accidentally miss them.

Now, let me disappear somewhere and meditate to regain my lost energy ...

*faints*

ghazghkull

2008-05-18, 21:45

This is the only thing that i can do for now...

ONWARDS, TO NEO-CADIAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA~

*does EPIC POINT TO THE WEST*

*Rides his AX-Modified NOD MCV towards the Sunset while working on his new Index Post*

*face palms*

WHY am I not surprised ><

Kha

2008-05-18, 21:57

Now that you've seen the index, let's get down to the basics.

Welcome to the HOTTEST place on Animesuki, and the 2nd Incarnation of the Original Character Creation and Discussion Thead.

The home of BURNING MANLY SENTAI SPIRITS OF EPIC PASSION & KHRACK of the Dai-Klerik Dan. :3

http://i14.photobucket.com/albums/a347/khathecleric/TengenShoujoNanoha.jpg

Welcome to...

Outer Cadia

Please leave your sanity at the door.

[Cadian Tutorials Construction: 5%]

ghazghkull

2008-05-18, 22:00

If this Neo-Cadia involves being a water-logged retirement home, ZETTAI KINSHI!!! :frustrated::frustrated::frustrated:

Cadia is more than that! Outer Cadia is a nation, a young growing nation! We shall herald the next state of Cadia with gusto and virile vigor, like we always have!

PEACE THROUGH PROCREATION!!!

(Sorry that's the only p-word that I had off the top of my head with some remote connection to Creation. Rushing to the next class... :heh:)

@Ghaz: Why not? That's why we have this picture as our banner:

It's just us, and the spirit of the Dai-Klerik Dan. :3

*RUNS*

:twitch::eyespin::uhoh::eyebrow::twitch::eyespin:: uhoh::eyebrow::twitch::eyespin::uhoh::eyebrow::twi tch::eyespin::uhoh::eyebrow:

Okay....................that's all I have to say.........................

:twitch::eyespin::uhoh::eyebrow::twitch::eyespin:: uhoh::eyebrow::twitch::eyespin::uhoh::eyebrow::twi tch::eyespin::uhoh::eyebrow:

Kha

2008-05-18, 22:02

:twitch::eyespin::uhoh::eyebrow::twitch::eyespin:: uhoh::eyebrow::twitch::eyespin::uhoh::eyebrow::twi tch::eyespin::uhoh::eyebrow:

Okay....................that's all I have to say.........................

:twitch::eyespin::uhoh::eyebrow::twitch::eyespin:: uhoh::eyebrow::twitch::eyespin::uhoh::eyebrow::twi tch::eyespin::uhoh::eyebrow::3

*FLIES AT EPIC SPEED*

PS: You know, other people would just do a Kha Breaker... :3

Tempest Dynasty

2008-05-18, 22:21

:3

*FLIES AT EPIC SPEED*

PS: You know, other people would just do a Kha Breaker... :3

Oh fine.

*clears throat*

KHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA- *coughs and takes a sip of water*
-AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA AAAAAAAAAAAA!!!

*Maximum Rider Power HYPER KICK Kha INTO THE MILKY WAY*

ghazghkull

2008-05-18, 22:30

XenahortCharybdis

2008-05-18, 22:34

Tempest this is how you do it:

*Activates Hyper Zector*

MAXIMUM RIDER POWER

*One, Two, Three, flips the horn over*

"Hyper Kick"

*flips the horn over*

RIDER KICK

*Runs up to Kha and obliterates him with an all powerful Hyper Kick*

Oh, so we're moving camp, yeah? Sounds good (so I can view OCs that I missed at my own leisure.)

...

*eyes Ghaz's horrendous mutilation of our own Klerik of Khrack*

:eyebrow: Now that was...quite useless, Masked Rider G.H.A.Z., actually, he'll be back anyway.

And my hangover's gone. That's reason to celebrate :D

*back to the drawing board*

PhoenixFlare

2008-05-18, 22:46

:twitch::twitch::twitch::twitch:

O...okay..... XD

Well considering that Erio's directory was quite out of date, and he's not active that much anymore, we need a new person to maintain the directory and such.

Which will include a lot of cleaning up and removing of profiles from people who aren't even active on OC anymore.

Mm, I'd suggest to still include them (the inactive ones) in the new index post, since it's possible that someone might find it useful to use some of their characters/plots/ideas or the lure of OC finally leads them back to the thread. The higher possibility would be the former, but their contribution to the thread must be considered.

... and what madness is this with massive spammage before the thread's closure? :p

@Skyfall: We're not able to edit posts in locked threads, I just tried it. :heh: But, I suppose it isn't really that big a matter.

mamott99

2008-05-18, 22:49

Not sure is Mamott and al have a post here...?

Haven't created a character yet. I might actually put it off until the new thread's created.

Kha

2008-05-18, 23:41

This thread is pretty much my baby, along with Keroko, Nighty, Lowe and several of the vets, so this spammage is kinda because I'm gonna miss it... :(

Then again, I'm glad I'd get to start again, this time with my Khrack refined and honed to potency. :3

We can link to the old index page via the new one, so we can link to the old profiles and still save space. :D

@Mamott: Looking forward to him/her in the new thread. GTA FTW :3

LimitedEternal

2008-05-18, 23:48

Guess I better get in some parting words before the main event...

I'm actually kinda glad we're starting over. What with the meltdown recently and the spiritual fresh start, it feels like a new Cadia. Cracky still, but still new.

Looking forward to the new thread, and may it grow as vast as this one ;)

@Kha: I can't believe you forgot me...T_T

Estavali

2008-05-19, 00:13

@Ghaz: Why not? That's why we have this picture as our banner:

http://i14.photobucket.com/albums/a347/khathecleric/TengenShoujoNanoha.jpg

It's just us, and the BURNING MANLY SENTAI SPIRITS OF EPIC PASSION & KHRACK of the Dai-Klerik Dan. :3

*RUNS*

*scratches head*

I would suggest using either

this:

http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/th_310435.jpg (http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/310435.jpg)

... or this:
http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/th_1418x2158_178413652.jpg (http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/1418x2158_178413652.jpg)

.... if you want all three Aces together. Alternatively we can also use

this:
http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/th_fateuf9.jpg (http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/fateuf9.jpg)

... for a cool Fate pic. But then again, this is the Nanoha OC thread. Who better to represent it than the White Devil herself? If so, I would suggest

this:
http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/th_12801024.jpg (http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/12801024.jpg)

.. or this:
http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/th_e65b12d4621a104437d2815a8087122c.jpg (http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/e65b12d4621a104437d2815a8087122c.jpg)

.... as our new welcomer.

Thus ends my two cents. But before I return to that empty void called Lurk-Space, allow me to present my personal choice in this matter:

http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/64bdaaf75eef70ac4473372cc21e94b5.jpg

ONWARDS! TO THE NEW CADIA!

ghazghkull

2008-05-19, 00:25

*scratches head*

I would suggest using either

this:

http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/th_310435.jpg (http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/310435.jpg)

... or this:
http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/th_1418x2158_178413652.jpg (http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/1418x2158_178413652.jpg)

.... if you want all three Aces together. Alternatively we can also use

this:
http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/th_fateuf9.jpg (http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/fateuf9.jpg)

... for a cool Fate pic. But then again, this is the Nanoha OC thread. Who better to represent it than the White Devil herself? If so, I would suggest

this:
http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/th_12801024.jpg (http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/12801024.jpg)

.. or this:
http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/th_e65b12d4621a104437d2815a8087122c.jpg (http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/e65b12d4621a104437d2815a8087122c.jpg)

.... as our new welcomer.

Thus ends my two cents. But before I return to that empty void called Lurk-Space, allow me to present my personal choice in this matter:

http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/64bdaaf75eef70ac4473372cc21e94b5.jpg

ONWARDS! TO THE NEW CADIA!

Not sure...

Personally, I'd like to see an image that can actually be compressed so that it looks like a banner, rather that these poster images :3

LoweGear

2008-05-19, 00:43

ghazghkull

2008-05-19, 00:44

Would we still be able to quote from a locked thread? And just when I finally decided to do some breaking too ^^;

Anyways, not like we didn't expect this, but kinda sad moving out. Hopefully we can make the new thread prosper like this one did :nod:

Just back up all your material, and then start to post your new material on the new thread. I'll be keeping tabs, so don't worry too much :3

tshouryuu

2008-05-19, 01:04

Is it possible to link back to posts this thread after it's closed? if not I'm going to grab all my stuff .

ghazghkull

2008-05-19, 01:08

Is it possible to link back to posts this thread after it's closed? if not I'm going to grab all my stuff .

I suggest you do, and simply just post it in the new thread.

Skyfall

2008-05-19, 01:55

PhoenixFlare

2008-05-19, 02:06

Wowwwww.

Another ginormous breaker has been completed, and cookies are ready to be handed out.

I would see if you broke the record, but I'm typing this at a little before 9 AM, which is wayyy earlier than I'm used to getting up...:eyespin: I need to figure out why I'm up so early so I can avoid doing it again. :3

Either way, though...200 whole pages...I can't fault you for a heroic effort.

You're up early because my Backlog Breaker basically rocked the world. :heh:

*runs at ludicrous speed*

Thank you! I'm glad you like it. :)

Of course I do! :D

Yes she is Hayate! xD
Her titel "Dark Lady of the Nocturnal Glacier" is a innuendo on her old titel "Mistress of the Night Sky" and the fact that she has some awsome ice elemental spells. Her new name "Hel" comes pretty obviously from norse mythology, as some of her spells have names from the norse mythology too.

:nod:

But ...

Noooo! The Queen of Niflheim has finally arrived, and the world is doomed! :eyespin::eyespin::eyespin:

Just in case, don't make her have an ugly half for her face. :heh:

The last entry was for my "normal" story, wich features Elric and Rinya as the main characters. This one now was for my "Dark Future Setting" (wich also has 3 entrys already). Both storys are pretty much unrelated.

Ah, understood. :nod: Delicious writing must continue. :D

And yes! I AM a bastard!
I killed her! And I had FUN doing it! MUAHAHAHAHAHAHAAA!!

*PF has killed Kyral for 200 gold! PF is GODLIKE!*

:frustrated::frustrated::frustrated::frustrated::f rustrated:

Alright... if it's already translated that way.

And thanks for qouting that... I saw now that I forgott the word "book" in my post. :heh:

:heh:

And what book? :confused:

Except the last one yes.
Thank you!
I really like drawing and the OC thread pretty much gives me opportunities to draw :D

True, true :D. We need more artists, I might need to bribe a few of them later :p.

Funny how I can remember seemingly pointless tidbits like this and not some of the more useful info that I need to know:uhoh:. Not sure where it was exactly but it was during a discussion of Grandia's wound. I swear that I had read that a line that implied that it was Grandia that was talking even though he was still in a coma at the time... Like I said I probably read it wrong when I was going through since I couldn't find it again when I came back the next day :heh:

Ah, okay. :heh:

Arf wasn't shafted in the series?:twitch: Maybe you got my meaning wrong :heh:

Uhm, I guess I did. :uhoh: What did you mean again by "shafted"? :heh:

:uhoh::uhoh: *hides behind a pillar*

Leona: Good, and stay there. *eyes glinting maliciously* I'm going to interrogate Aurion and Yuuno instead.

:heh:

*flees at ludicrous speed*

They seem to be taking a lot of flak from their 'masters'. Perhaps not so much as Fate did in S1 but much more than the numbers did... (and we all know what happened there)

Ah, I see what you mean. Don't worry, we'll see whether they decide to dump the Magi for the Bureau. But, at this point, I think what they'll do is just handing themselves directly into prison. >_>

Probably not an official term.... although fun to muck around with in fps... Halo in particular XD

:heh: I haven't have enough experience in FPS for these terms, though. :(

IRC, I was referring to how she was able to block the incoming attack using the 'string' mode (yep, like I said, I've got a great memory:rolleyes::heh:). This is once all the Templars are rushing back to Vestrell. COuld be wrond about it though..

... Oh no, I've been busted! :eyespin:

Nah, just kidding. :heh: The string cocoon wasn't actually meant as a barrier-type spell, but more of a counteroffensive. If the Templars pushed further, they'd have critically damaged Leona outright from both sides. The "outer shell" is basically the outer ... perimeter of the string cocoon. Imagine Hyuuga Neji's Hakkesho Kaiten that doesn't exactly stay rigid, but is flexible instead.

Leona knew this, so she expanded the "cocoon" to encompass their hands, thereby allowing the strings to have a chance to "cut" them. Well, it's a big gamble: she'll lose her life if the enemy pushed for the kill but the Templars will also lose their hands. :p The pain at their fingers made the Templars reflexively pull back.

No worries, take your time. NOt like i can complain about slow fic writing when I haven't updated myself in how many months... I really hate programming units and how they suck away time... That and a lack of motivation of doing much..

Understandable. That's one of the reasons I stay away from IT, anyway, what with the crazy workload even if the pay is lucrative.

Don't worry, I'm sure motivation will hit you like a giant hammer out of nowhere. :)

When I spank people, I give them diaper money for remuneration too, you know!

I'd prefer hospital coverage, but I guess this is the least that you can do. :p

If you read both their profiles, you realize Zarakiya is a more ideal choice. Juste as a forward and front charger, along with Atrum Veruka, are riskier choices for a commander as compared to support/defense/trap based Zarakiya. Also, their characters are vastly different: Zarakiya has a far cooler head.

Probably, but sometimes hotheads might make a better leader ... well, that's just me. :p

Each Aerternis House almost has a different kind of magic as compared to another, although most of them use the "runes". Generating weapons is like "Tracing", yes. That's simple enough, though for some advanced weapons, such as the "Artifacts of the Gods", Activating them required "runes". Generating them on the other hand...is something else altogether :p

Now, this is getting even more out of hand. I'll just wait until you find it necessary to reveal to us.

Zarakiya's special abilities are quite useless sometimes, actually. Only Ricardo's are any good.

The Terminus is practically useless for Zarakiya, true. However, I will not extend this to others...And as for the Aces, he's just somewhat under them in power output, and all he needs to do is stall for time and then kick their asses.

Not only do they lose their immortality, they actually actively degenerate, emphasis on "actively", which progressively cuts their lifespan down to flat nil. The average Aerternis can still be dealt a fatal blow and die, yes. But die if left alone? No. The less they use magic, the better, really, that's what I'm trying to say :D

I know, but the significance of the impact doesn't seem like a bad drawback, if you get what I mean. Basically, it doesn't really make any difference should they choose to use magic or not in the first place, given that time is one of the things that most authors control rigorously, myself included :p. If it's time for them to die, they'll die, regardless of whether they use magic excessively or not :heh:. But all right, we'll just wait and see how.

I think I'll cover this in the plot itself, because it's supposed to be (a secret!)

Fine with me. :)

Ack-hem. It doesn't cut through anything, it is said to be able to. He can hardly even generate it anyway, so it's pointless for now :D

Then, the point of it being in the spell list ...

Don't tell me it's for COOL and AWESOME. :p

Yes, actually. He's quite h4xxed for being someone's familiar :p (You could instead dread how powerful his master is)

Although if you cut him enough times, he'd probably run out of stamina, since it's his body's own natural reaction, and it DOES drain a lot of energy, so he'll avoid being hit too much. It's a bad idea when your body over-metabolizes in an attempt to save you, it could kill you actually.

*dreads*

:joke:

I've always viewed this kind of "lethal damage dampener" as being notoriously HAXX-ed, since it's a strong point that some RP-ers would use to create imbalances in the storyline. But, it's mostly RP :p. Plus, we don't exactly know how much Terminus he's left, so it's difficult to say that he should have died at that exact time. But, never mind, I'll leave it to your hand.

I wonder who'd be dumb enough to have this magical heavy-duty vacuum cleaner on all day...so no, it activates once, and that's it, it's back to being a jacket again.

No, what I mean was, it's a one-time activation (consumes the said amount of energy), and it's usable for the rest of the day. It doesn't drain energy until the duration expires.

But thanks for the clarification.

Won't happen. He'd be hacked to pieces before getting close enough, and we all know why, don't we all :rolleyes:

But, the pheromones will make them drop their guard, won't they? :p It's easy to kill someone when it happens, what with Ricardo's abilities.

Tier 6 and 7 weapons are special, like I said...and I'm not telling any time soon about them :D

Fine with me.

That mini-clip was mistaken for a chapter? Oops. Maybe I should add the tag "Preview" to it...nahhh, I'm too lazy. Need my sleep :heh:

It doesn't look like a preview, nor it's like a prologue ...

Hahaha. Sora and Nike are the two Takeuchi Brothers from Air Gear (by Ogure Ito, or Oh! Great). Sora uses wind, and Nike uses Earth, and so you get the idea :D

I like Trystahn. He's very much the gentleman, unlike my rather disrespectful, half-insubordinate snark of a main OC... :D

Ah, badly mistaken identities. Use more uncommon names! :mad:

But, no, Sharazad's main element is water, though in the absence of it, she can control wind and earth.

Trystahn's only a gentleman as long as he has to protect the person. When not in the dire situation to do so ... pray for your safety :uhoh:.

If you need it, I can help out. To make things easier, we only need to move the active users over to the next thread. Off the top of my head that's:

Kha
Keroko
Aaron008R
Nightengale
LoweGear
Satty
Kyral
Liingo
PF yuritwincest1
PG yuritwincest2
Tormenk
WildGoose
Tk3997
You
Reiji cough :3
-Fate-
Sheba
Tempest
Xena
Krisslanza
EvaXgouki
SpaceBrotha and the Tsundere Tower
SaintX

Not sure is Mamott and al have a post here...?

...pardon me if I miss anyone, I'm rushing to class now. :p

Also, I'll be rebuilding my OC vault in the new Thread (whohoo the TRUE 5th Edition Codex! :3), so dun bother to link to me just yet.

Yuritwincest ...?

*goes to find PhoenixG for practical application*

:p

Guess I better get in some parting words before the main event...

I'm actually kinda glad we're starting over. What with the meltdown recently and the spiritual fresh start, it feels like a new Cadia. Cracky still, but still new.

Looking forward to the new thread, and may it grow as vast as this one ;)

@Kha: I can't believe you forgot me...T_T

Just erase Kha's name from the top of the list and add yours in. :p

*scratches head*

I would suggest using either

this:

http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/th_310435.jpg (http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/310435.jpg)

... or this:
http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/th_1418x2158_178413652.jpg (http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/1418x2158_178413652.jpg)

.... if you want all three Aces together. Alternatively we can also use

this:
http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/th_fateuf9.jpg (http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/fateuf9.jpg)

... for a cool Fate pic. But then again, this is the Nanoha OC thread. Who better to represent it than the White Devil herself? If so, I would suggest

this:
http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/th_12801024.jpg (http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/12801024.jpg)

.. or this:
http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/th_e65b12d4621a104437d2815a8087122c.jpg (http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/e65b12d4621a104437d2815a8087122c.jpg)

.... as our new welcomer.

Thus ends my two cents. But before I return to that empty void called Lurk-Space, allow me to present my personal choice in this matter:

http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y86/Nothung/64bdaaf75eef70ac4473372cc21e94b5.jpg

ONWARDS! TO THE NEW CADIA!

Most lovely Fate-sama! And Hayate-sama! And Nanoha-sama!

*dies from excessive blood loss*

Would we still be able to quote from a locked thread? And just when I finally decided to do some breaking too ^^;

Anyways, not like we didn't expect this, but kinda sad moving out. Hopefully we can make the new thread prosper like this one did :nod:

I think quoting is still possible, since quotes use post number (seven digits) as reference.

Kyral

2008-05-19, 02:22

Just in case, don't make her have an ugly half for her face. :heh:

You saw her on the poster!
She looks like always
:nod:

*PF has killed Kyral for 200 gold! PF is GODLIKE!*

:frustrated::frustrated::frustrated::frustrated:

*twitch* X_x

:heh:

And what book? :confused:

correction for great justice!

Sadly two things cought my eye...
*drops a big, ancient and ornamented book on the table and opens it.*

True, true :D. We need more artists, I might need to bribe a few of them later :p.

:nod:

ghazghkull

2008-05-19, 02:25

*sigh*

somehow i knew my announcement would open the flood gates of spam ...

So, if i understood correctly ghazghkull will be the one managing the directory post ?

The Death and Rebirth itself will be carried out sometime later today.

Yes, I will be managing the directory post :3

And if possible, mind do it within the next hour possible, due to the fact I'm going to be going to bed soon and all ><

Kha

2008-05-19, 02:28

Alternatively, I can handle the directory post since I'll be awake. Classes over, so I've got the rest of the day. Drop me a PM/Post so that I'm not keeping everyone waiting.

And yes I forgot LE. I knew lacking coffee was a bad thing >< And I dun know if sturmturmoil is alive or dead...

ghazghkull

2008-05-19, 02:32

PhoenixFlare

2008-05-19, 02:33

Anyone who can do so can do so. Just see if anyone has the time.

And Kha, the coffee is a lie. :p

Kha

2008-05-19, 02:38

Damn didn't manage to usurp Ghaz.

No I did not say anything. :uhoh:

Go Ghaz!!!

*gives Ghaz coffee with artificial sedatives.*

No sugar. :D

ghazghkull

2008-05-19, 02:41

Damn didn't manage to usurp Ghaz.

No I did not say anything. :uhoh:

Go Ghaz!!!

*gives Ghaz coffee with artificial sedatives.*

No sugar. :D

lol *puts down the coffee*

coffee doesn't work for me actually :3

all it does is make me more tired than I already am :3

PhoenixFlare

2008-05-19, 02:45

Kha's trying to make you tired so that you'll sleep and he'll usurp you! :p Notice the sedatives? :p

Edit: Lowe (and anyone else interested), I just tried it out, linking to a locked thread is possible if you know the post number as reference.

Keroko

2008-05-19, 03:09

Takamachi Georashi Keroko (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=958100&postcount=302)
- Close/Mid-range Dogfighting Mage; Mage Rank: S; Magic System: Aspect/Velka mixture; Military Rank: Captain
- Preview: Adopted sister of Nanoha and 'the fourth Ace', has been fighting alongside the group since the beginning.
- Fluffs Impossible is what Rogues do best (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=988247&postcount=1586), Sisters by soul (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1000227&postcount=2190), Meeting an idol. (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1138930&postcount=9236)
- A day in training A day in training: Grunts, (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1109991&postcount=7297), A day in training: Subaru, (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1174884&postcount=11829)
- Into the Past part 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1073689&postcount=5589)
- 4koma Soaring the Skies (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1113896&postcount=7640)
Knight of the Sky, Tesla (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=987123&postcount=1562)
- Mid Range Combat Tactician; Mage rank: AAA; Magic system: Velka; Militairy Rank: Captain.
- Preview: One of the Wolkenritter, Tesla is the group's tactician and ranged support.
- Holding the line (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1162008&postcount=10873)
Syn Virage (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2703326&postcount=8397)
-Close-range combatant; Magic system: Belkan
-Close friend of Vivio due to similar backgrounds.
Eden Acura -=UNDER REVISION=-
-Type-0 Sentoukijin, possibly related to Nove, and by extension, Ginga and Subaru. Specializes in espionage and infiltration.
Lady Alistina Carter (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2772618&postcount=8493)
Legend of Ancient Belka: Fall of an Empire. -=Out Of Date=-
-Sneak Peak (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1173067&postcount=11681)
-Prologue (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1173067&postcount=11681)
-Part 1: A burning vessel (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1202799&postcount=13099)
-Part 2: Playing with politics (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1224614&postcount=14159)
"Rogue Squadron"
- Wing 1 Introduction (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1037304&postcount=4091)

Watarase Jun (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1039371&postcount=4171)
Tycho Chelchu (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1049983&postcount=4559)

http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y191/Liinna/Nanoha/Keroko_Profile_Background.png

Kha

2008-05-19, 03:13

PhoenixG

2008-05-19, 03:14

If you need it, I can help out. To make things easier, we only need to move the active users over to the next thread. Off the top of my head that's:

Kha
Keroko
Aaron008R
Nightengale
LoweGear
Satty
Kyral
Liingo
PF yuritwincest1
PG yuritwincest2
Tormenk
WildGoose
Tk3997
You
Reiji cough :3
-Fate-
Sheba
Tempest
Xena
Krisslanza
EvaXgouki
SpaceBrotha and the Tsundere Tower
SaintX

Not sure is Mamott and al have a post here...?

...pardon me if I miss anyone, I'm rushing to class now. :p

Also, I'll be rebuilding my OC vault in the new Thread (whohoo the TRUE 5th Edition Codex! :3), so dun bother to link to me just yet.

WTF do you mean with yuritwincest..... :twitch::twitch:

You... XD

You forgot our fluff master....

Yuritwincest ...?

*goes to find PhoenixG for practical application*

:p

Since when did I agree? :twitch::twitch:

BTW A locked thread only means that you can post or edit that thread anymore.... ( except you're a mod)
So linking, quoting is possible

ghazghkull

2008-05-19, 03:14

Granted, we've got a lot more ppl in here than we used to. :3

To think I wanted to post another scene today; I'll hold it for the new thread.

However, is it possible to browse the locked thread? I'm not home yet, and I need to grab a lot of stuff scattered all over the thread, and I can take more than 24hrs for that... :heh:

Yeah you can. LOL Heck I occasionally browse through the locked up FF thread just to look up anything that I may want to transfer over into the current thread :3

Fate T Harlaown

2008-05-19, 03:17

-Fate-'s little OC Corner >_<

All my OC will be posted in here including the sketches of the characters involved in my fanfic.

Madou Kishi Ikazuchi Asclei

Krosel was the planet that supplied most of TSABs raw materials need for creating devices and other equipments for their mages. During StrikerS, a civil war almost broke out in the kingdom of Aldia—the largest and most prospered kingdom in Krosel. The rebels tried to overthrow the king of Aldia due to his tyranny and to stop any further expansions since it might become an interdimensional issue. However, the information was leaked and the rebels were crushed before they could initiate their plans.

The leaders of the rebels who happened to be mostly council members and high ranking knights of the kingdom were executed right away. Cities and towns that secretly supported the rebellion were burned to the ground. Its people were severely punished and few lived to tell the demise of those who perished. TSAB decided not to support the rebels because even though the king was tyrannical, he was the one that provided them the materials that they needed the most. In addition, TSAB had a treaty with Aldia--stating that TSAB would not intervene in any domestic issues in Aldia as long as they provided the materials that the TSAB needed and informed them of all business transactions that the Aldian Kingdom had with other countries or planets. Not only that, TSAB had no time to waste on other people's issues due to the fact that Midchilda itself is in danger of being destroyed by the Cradle.

Years later, TSAB not only found out that Jail Scaglietti was working for the TSAB High Council who supported him financially, the TSAB also discovered that the ones that provided the necessary material for Scaglietti’s inventions was none other than the Aldian Kingdom. The new High Council members confronted the Aldian King about the issue and accused him of violating the treaty for not giving them any information in regards of the materials that was shipped secretly. The King defended himself by stating that the even though the rest of the TSAB ranks didn’t know of the business transaction that he had with the former three high councils, it didn’t change the fact that Aldia made deals with the TSAB officials. In addition, the king claimed that he did inform the TSAB about the shipment records since the former High Council members knew about it and was not his fault that the three of them kept it as a secret. The High Council stated that they were supposed to send the data to the Interdimensional Trading Agency of Midchilda and not directly to the former High Council members.

The arguments on the issue lasted several months and escalated to the point where the Aldian Kingdom stopped supplying TSAB with the materials they needed. TSAB now had no other choice but to rely heavily on smaller kingdoms for supplies. Due to lack of materials, many research and weapons development programs in the TSAB slowly progressed. Five months later, the Aldian Kingdom found out that the Kingdom of Orthia had been hiding some of the rebels that planned to overthrow the Aldian King in the past. The Aldian King demanded for the rebels to be handed over; however, the Orthian Kingdom refused since the Aldians that they hid were just the families of those who planned the rebellion. In addition, those people had become citizens of Orthia itself. However, the Aldian King could careless. Thus, he sent two thousand troops, five hundred autonomous tanks and other machineries. He also included three hundred Aldian knights in the forces that crossed the borders of Orthia.

It seems war was inevitable. As they cross the border, the Aldian forces were greeted by three thousand Orthian troops. Much to their surprise, the TSAB ground forces were there as well. After six hours, the battle commenced and lasted for two days. The battled ended with the victory of the Aldians. The presence of the Aldian Knights contributed greatly into their success. The Orthians in the other hand lost ninety percent of its forces and the TSAB ground forces lost many of its tanks and mages. As a result, both the Orthian and TSAB forces had no choice but withdraw.

Since Orthia was one of the few remaining kingdoms that supplied the TSAB with the materials they needed for creating power sources for their battleships; they had to protect it. Another issue that bothered the TSAB the most was the unconfirmed reports regarding Aldian Kingdom’s possible involvement in human experiments and researches that was banned by the TSAB. As a result, TSAB sent their newly developed ship, Varuna to Aldia. They then assigned Admiral Chrono Harlaown as its captain and was accompanied by Enforcers Fate T. Harlaown and Teana Lanster to investigate if the reports were true and were ordered to bring any solid evidence that they might find in the process as a top priority. In addition, in order to strengthen their forces in Orthia, TSAB sent Signum, Vita, Zafira, as well as the 97-109th Battalion.

After arriving, Varuna stayed floating in a nearby lake that was surrounded by a forest and mountains which was about 78 kilometers away from the borders of the Aldian Kingdom. Two days had past since their arrival, Fate and Teana began their investigation. The two eventually found out that the Aldian Kingdom’s military force was bigger than the treaty allowed. On the third day, another agent informed Varuna about a research facility in the Vealar Mountains. Fate and Teana headed to the location that was stated in the report; as they arrive in the mountainous area, they found out that the facility was heavily guarded by soldiers. They were lucky that the mist was thick. Teana then used Optic Hide EX Plus on Fate and on herself and manage to get past the security. As they walkthrough the large hallway, they came across a large door. The door itself was big enough for Voltaire to fit in. Then they followed the instruction that was included in the report and inserted the security cards in the left and right side of the door and pressed the switch at the same time. The door slowly moved sideways...a cold mist came out from the opening. As they walked slowly through the dark hallway, they saw several bodies inside the tubes. Some were dissected and had cybernetic parts added on to them. Many of them had labels on them--such as how long the subject lived after the implantation of the cybernetic parts, the name of the subject, race, gender and age. They also saw several body parts and internal organs being displayed. The two were awestruck. Some of it belonged to children. Fate and Teana were hesitant but they kept on moving and stumble upon the researchers‘ meeting room. They picked up the documents that was around the desk and started reading parts of it. As they read, Fate and Teana found out that it was a research to improve the current Combat Cyborg technology. They also found out that many of the subjects were taken from the towns or villages involuntarily. Fate and Teana moved on to another room and as they walked, they could smell a familiar scent. When they entered the room and turned on the lights, Teana dropped to her knees and vomited right away after seeing the blood all over the room. There were iron beds all over the room and there were still blood stains on them. It was the room where the researchers dissected their subjects and implanted cybernetic parts on them while they were still alive. Fate blanked out but she came back to her senses when a researcher opened the door and saw them. Fate then restrained the man and decided to take him out before he could make any noise. Fate and Teana then decided to take him to Varuna for questioning. As they gathered the research documents that they could get a hold of, more researchers came in. Teana then immediately used Optic Hide EX Plus to hide herself and Fate who was carrying the researcher and made their escape.

After knocking out several soldiers who were guarding the facility, Fate and Teana made it out and headed directly to Varuna as fast as they could. As they made their way through the mountainous area, a powerful blast of wind suddenly hit Teana which knocked her off of her flight path. To make it worse, Optic Hide EX Plus was disabled after she received the attack. Fate was about to go down to assist Teana; however, someone suddenly attacked her from behind but she managed to blocked the sword with Bardiche. As she gazed at the one who made the attack, she saw a man with black hair and red eye. He was carrying a zweihander class sword but it was shorter compared to the Zanber Form.

As Fate prepared to use lightning bind to get the researcher out of the way, another blast of wind was on its away. Fate managed to avoid the attack with Blitz Rush. Another man made his appearance, this time his weapon was a gauntlet and a powerful gust was completely surrounding him. His hair was dark brown and his eyes were blue. Fate was at a disadvantage, not only she couldn't defend herself properly while carrying the researcher; she also couldn't fight in full force. Teana called out to Fate as she flew back. Fate then decided to let go of the researcher while Teana caught him with her arms. At the same time, Fate used Trident Lancer which headed directly towards the two Aldian Knights. However, a powerful gust expanded on a sphere form which surrounded the two knights. The sphere prevented the Trident Lancer from hitting them. Suddenly the swordsman appeared behind Fate and carried out a vertical slash but Fate blocked it. The swordsman responded by kicking Fate in her left waist which caused her to be thrown off balance. However, Fate gathered her strength and used Blitz Rush again and responded to the attack with a Haken Slash. The attack hit the knight's face which caused a burned cut on his left cheek.

http://i37.photobucket.com/albums/e51/Lantist/Artworks/Scan10013sw-1.jpg

The swordsman then responded by thrusting his blade towards Fate but she blocked it with Bardiche. However; the thrust was too strong. In addition, the lightning that was causing the immense light on the knight's blade looked like a cannon that was about to fire. The blinding light left the sword and headed towards Fate. Fate flew back immediately and blocked it with her field; however, the attack penetrated her defensive spell and made a direct hit which caused Fate to crash into the nearest mountain.

After leaving the unconscious researcher near a cliff, Teana intended to assist Fate but her hands were full. The knight with the gauntlet prevented her from giving Fate any assistance. The gauntlet user cast Wind Cutter which homed directly to Teana. Since avoiding it was hard, Teana responded by using Crossfire Shoot which shot down all the wind sickles. The collision between the two spells created an explosion. The gauntlet user then took the opportunity and dashed directly to the fading smoke and saw a faint figure inside. Then, a powerful wind surrounded his gauntlet and punched the figure. It was a direct hit; however, the gauntlet user was surprised when he saw the figure dematerialized into smaller magic particles.

"Wha! An illusion?" he gasped.

Then the gauntlet user sensed a powerful spell being cast. When he looked around, he
saw Teana casting her bombardment spell, Phantom Blazer. The problem he's facing
now was that, there were five Teanas surrounding him and casting the same spell.

"Another illusion," the gauntlet user thought to himself.

He didn't know which the real one was. He decided to use a wide range wind spell. The offensive spell hit all five Teanas but they were all silhouettes. He then saw the real Teana who was further above. He then realized that she used an invisible spell like the one earlier and used the silhouettes as a distraction while the real one was farther away and was out of his sight. While Teana was about to unleash her Star Dust Blazer (A new variation of Phantom Blazer), the gauntlet user responded by preparing an offensive spell. As he prepared to attack, a shooting spell hit him from the back of his head. It turned out that Teana cast Shoot Barret F ahead of time which homed to the gauntlet user while she was casting her Star Dust Blazer. The attack was a direct hit. As he was falling, the gauntlet user was preparing to cast a defensive spell to defend himself from Teana's Star Dust Blazer. However, when he turned his head towards Teana, who was in a higher altitude than him, he saw what was under her skirt which caused him to lose concentration. When he came to his senses, it was already too late. The bombardment spell was on its way. The spell made a direct hit which caused him to crash into the ground and created an explosion right after.

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As the swordsman levitated while looking at Fate on the ground, the huge explosion from the direction where his partner was fighting got his attention.

"Don't tell me...Lanos..."

The swordsman then sensed Fate flying towards him again. Midway before she reached the swordsman, a sphere of lightning surrounded Fate. After she passed through it, Fate was now on her Shin Sonic Form and Bardiche Riot Form. The swordsman prepared himself against the mage who charged at him. Fate then made an upward slash but the swordsman avoided it by moving to his right slightly. Fate followed by making a horizontal slash but the swordsman avoided it again by moving back and farther away from Fate's range. However, Fate suddenly combined both blades which created a larger one and made a diagonal slash. The swordsman parried the attack and countered but Fate avoided his slash by using Blitz Rush again. Fate then appeared behind the swordsman and carried out a horizontal slash but the swordsman avoided the attack by flying downwards. As he descended while facing Fate, he saw Trident Blades coming after him. The swordsman avoided and deflected several blades but when the last three were about to reach him, the blades suddenly exploded.

The swordsman flew out of the smoke and pointed his sword towards Fate, who separated her sword into two and used his shooting spell, Rail Shot. Fate deflected all the projectiles as she dashed full speed towards the swordsman. When Fate reached him, she then used both of her swords at the same time and made a cross slash. The swordsman blocked it again but Fate followed it with kick. When the kick was about to hit the swordsman's face, he suddenly moved his head to avoid it. Before Fate's foot passed by completely on his head, the swordsman grabbed it and threw Fate directly to the ground.

As Fate was falling, she cast Trident Lancer again but the swordsman deflected all of it as he chased after her. Fate then hit the ground on her foot which caused a big crater. Right after she landed, Fate jumped back immediately which caused her to avoid the swordsman's downward slash. She then proceeded by using Trident Smasher against the swordsman who just landed on the ground. Unable to avoid it on time, the swordsman stayed on the same spot and thrust his sword towards the middle part of the Trident Smasher. He pierced through the Trident Smasher which split it in two as it passed by him.

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Fate was astonished from what she saw.

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The swordsman was about to counterattack but a shooting spell was headed towards him. The knight avoided it and looked at the direction where it came from. He then saw Teana who arrived on the scene.

"Surrender at once! There is no way you can win against the two of us by yourself!" Teana demanded.

The swordsman lowered his blade and stayed silent. The smirk on his face greatly annoyed Teana. Even though, he's facing two opponents, he was still composed and not threatened at all.

"Where's the other knight and the researcher, Teana?" Fate asked.

"I left the researcher in one of the trees near the cliff not too far from here. I cast a bind
on the other knight and left him in the place where he crashed," Teana answered back.

Right after Teana gave her report, a gust of wind appeared next to the swordsman. As the
gust of wind disappeared, Teana saw a familiar figure. It was Lanos.

"That was sooooooooo rude, leaving an injured man by himself. To make it worse, you just had to put those binds on me. Geez, how long do you think it took me to get it off,"
Lanos complained like a spoiled child.

"Sorry Asclei! She was better than I expected! She got me pretty well," Lanos apologized
while scratching his head.

"I can pretty much imagine," Asclei responded while looking intently at Teana from top to bottom.

Teana was surprised to see Lanos who was supposed to be knocked out while Fate prepared herself for another combat.

"How did y-"

Fate in the other hand stared silently towards Asclei and prepared to attack.
Before Fate and Teana could make other movements, the swordsman, Asclei stated his
words.

"Don't you think this is enough? We have no intentions of fighting with you two any
further than this. We already achieved our own objective and same goes for the two of
you."

"That maybe so; however, you two have seen us. I can't just simply leave things the way
they are! With that said, sorry but we'll be taking you two with us as well! Teana!" Fate commanded.

"Yes! Fate-san!" Teana kept her weapons at the ready.

Asclei saw the response of the two and gave out a sigh.

"I guess it can't be helped then," Asclei exclaimed.

"I'd love to go with you ladies but..." Lanos uttered.

As Fate and Teana moved towards the two Aldian Knights, Asclei threw four lightning
daggers into the ground which released an extremely blinding light.

"Sorry, but we'll be taking our leave now. One more thing, it seems that the soldiers that
you two knocked out started to wake up one by one. I'd leave this area immediately if I
were you."

As the light faded away, the Aldian Knights were nowhere to be found.

"T-They're gone?! More importantly, Fate-san."

Teana turned to Fate's direction.

"I guess we have no other options, let's leave this area right away and report everything once we get back to Varuna," Fate replied

The two took the researcher with them and flew at top speed directly to Varuna.

Meanwhile.

Asclei and Lanos were headed back to their headquarters.

"So Teana is her name. It's Tea-chan then," Lanos stated while laughing perversely.

"To think that the TSAB mages that we'd encounter tonight were actually women. I guess the rumor was true," Asclei said in a soft voice.

"Rumor? What rumor?" Lanos asked curiously.

Asclei made a sigh after he heard Lanos' question.

"The rumor about TSAB's top mages being made up of mostly women!" Asclei answered back.

"REALLY?!!!!" Lanos responded enthusiastically and coughed right after.

"Well, at least they were actually pretty strong and pretty cute too." Lanos uttered in a low voice.

"So? How was it?" Asclei asked.

"It was black!" Lanos responded enthusiastically. His eyes shone like a jewel.

"Not that, you fool! I'm talking about her combat capabilites!"Asclei replied.

"Eh? Oh, she ok," Lanos answered back.

His tone of voice showed his lack of interest regarding the matter.

"That's it?" Asclei responded.

"Well, I found out that the thing underneath those skirts are not just for a show but
are dangerous tactical equipment that can distract healthy young beautiful men like us!"
Lanos answered back with a serious expression and tone of voice.

"You also had a good look, didn't you?" Lanos asked while turning his face towards Asclei's direction, waiting for his response.

"Sorry but I wasn't paying attention. I'd really appreciate it, if you stop putting me in the same group as you," Asclei answered back.

"Whatever the case is, at least we know now that TSAB have mages that can
actually match the King's Lance. Maybe the others would consider forming an alliance
this time," Asclei declared.

"True but if only they had more mages like that, the Aldian army wouldn't have crossed the borders of Orthia so easily," Lanos replied.

"Rest assured. According to Shanon, the TSAB sent some of their best mages and knights in Orthia. Drake also found out that TSAB had dispatched an SS ranked mage and will arrive in Orthia in a few days or so," Asclei uttered with a smile on his face.

"I see. I guess we donâ€™t have to worry about Orthia being taken down just yet,"

Lanos answered back.

"More importantly, I hope Shanon and Drake are going to be okay by themselves," Lanos stated with a worried look on his face.

"They'll be fine. Despite of their limited magic capabilities, their swordsmanship skills are more than enough to make up for it," Asclei responded confidently.

"I guess that's also true. More importantly. The soldiers in that facility must have notified the headquarters by now. We must cover up that wound on your face right away or else they'll become suspicious on how you got a burned cut on your cheek when you're suppose to be doing some desk work," Lanos replied.

"I guess so,"Asclei agreed.

"So Fate was her name...It can't be..." Asclei thought to himself.

When the two saw the city walls, they began to descend and entered the city of Fenice
which was the second nearest city to the research facility. It was also the city where
Asclei and Lanos were being stationed currently. The two snuck inside their base and
returned to their posts. With the return of the real Asclei and Lanos, the ones that took
their place while they were gone (subordinates that specialized in transformation spells)
left immediately while avoided being seen by others.

In the royal capital of Aldia, Melanos. The Aldian King was discussing his kingdom’s current situation. As usual he made contact with his subordinate through videoconference. He was discussing the advancement of their current projects with the 9th Lance, Versa Crew.

“How’s the situation so far?” the king asked.

“The progress that they’re making is slower than expected.” Versa Crew answered.

“It would probably take at least two to four months for it to be completed. It may also cause delays in “their” return here in Aldia.”

“Recreating that thing is harder than I expected. Even with all of the resources and manpower that we poured into this project, its still not enough to speedup its development.”

“Twenty years of excavation and research to revive the ancient artifact and another thirty years to create the necessary equipments to make it fully operational.” The Aldian king gritted his teeth due his frustration over the matter.

“I’m aware that you are starting to get impatient, my lord…But only a few more months and it’ll be completed.”

“That’s not the only reason why I’m agitated right now, Versa!” the king shouted as he slammed his hand against his throne which caused it be thrown out of its original location.

“Elgrad Lowren was abducted when he went to the Vealar Research Facility yesterday!”
The king exclaimed. Versa lightly pulled his body back after hearing the roar of the king.

“Elgrad? The one in charged of the production of…” Before Versa could finish his statement, the king yelled out “Yes, that very same man!”

“He is one of the major researchers that is part of the Sigma Project!” the king yelled out. “If he falls into the wrong hands and sings; it could cause some problems later on.”

“Hmmm…so you want us to locate and retrieve him?” Versa asked.

While the two were in a middle of their discussion, the King received an urgent transmission. As the King opened the line, the commander of the knights that he sent to investigate the issue regarding the intrusion reported his findings. The knight stated that he and his team had found the intruders. He nervously reported that it wasn‘t just one or two people that they had found. He and his team located an entire ship hiding near the mountain ranges around the borders of Aldia. When the knight sent the image of the ship that was mentioned, the king ordered his intelligence council to analyze it immediately. Unfortunately, the ship in question was not in their databanks at all.

“Stay low for now and observe the situation. Report any changes right away,” the king commanded.

“My lord, could it be…” Versa uttered.

“Perhaps…we will know soon enough,” the king responded.

The Aldian king then turned around and looked back. He then gave his orders to his subordinates.

“Mobilize our forces that are near the area. Since XIII and VII are close to the location, have them assist in the retrieval of the researcher and the documents as well,” The king commanded.

“Prioritize the rescue of Elgrad. You may kill him if he leaked any information or if the retrieval process proves to be difficult,” the king declared.

After hearing the orders given to them, all of the king’s subordinates bid their king farwell and ceased all transmissions with him.

Versa stood up and prepared to organize the forces needed. One of his subordinates who was listening curiously asked…

“Is the king sure about this? The intruders may have been the TSAB”

“Whoever they are, they entered our territory and was heavily armed. Furthermore, they abducted an Aldian citizen. I think we have the obligation to go after them,” Versa replied.

“But what if a war breaks out for sure this time? Versa’s subordinate asked once more.

“We managed to get away last time in Orthia since the TSAB forces didn‘t leave even after the warnings that we gave them,” the subordinate uttered.

“Now that you mention it, they were the ones that opened fire first at that time,” Versa replied in a sarcastic voice.

“Hmph! Whatever! we already had several skirmishes with those mongrels all over the place anyway. Even if we don’t make a big move right now, war is still inevitable in the end…Besides, the more TSAB mages comes to Krosel, the better it is for us,” Versa exclaimed as he exited the room.

-------------------------------------------------- Character Profiles -----------------------------------------------------

Asclei Foresythe
Main Profile (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1616094&postcount=333)
History (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1616931&postcount=356)

Lanos Skylark
Main Profile (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1607703&postcount=174)

Fate T. Harlaown
Main Profile (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1520244&postcount=23246)

Sierra Lancer
Main Profile (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1606082&postcount=133)

Skryd Edge

*Currently in Progress*

Liingo

2008-05-19, 04:10

Interesting news. Well at least it'll be easier to find things for a little while :heh:

Expect to see walls of text from me in the new thread. I'm planning to do a rebuild in light of the new info that's been revealed in the last few weeks/months that now push my own OC's into haxx regions (Can't have a haxx-buster with haxx now can we ;) )

FlameSparkZ

2008-05-19, 05:52

Skyfall

2008-05-19, 06:12

As previously stated, the old thread has been locked and this new one has been created. I also moved the last two pages of posts to this thread to help the flow of discussion. (Although i question the substance of some of the posts).

If there are any other posts that should be moved to this one or any other requests regarding the issue please let me know.

Kha

2008-05-19, 06:16

Magical Lyrical Wars

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[Post Depot Construction: 25%]

3 Pillars of Saint Church

The Path to Pedition: History of the Imperium von Belka
- First reading of the Damocles Sea Scrolls (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1851056&postcount=3659)
- Points to note with regards to Ancient Belka (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1855442&postcount=1419)
- Word of Vivio: The Return of the King (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1863027&postcount=1444)

Saint Guard: 3rd Orussian Regiment
Commissar Artei Smirnov (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2112423&postcount=4787)

Licht von Belka
Kha der Kleriker (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2066330&postcount=4629) (shovon Touareg)
+ Graduation (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1827397&postcount=3475)

Cleric Knights
Grand Meister Saber (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2066332&postcount=4630) - Sankt Kaiser Vivio
Knight Stella Zaki "Sak-tan" (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2066335&postcount=4631)
Sister-Captain Schach Nouera
Battle-Sister Sein
Battle-Sister Otto
Battle-Sister Deed

Adeptae Belkarum: Ultimarines
Canoness Marina Augusta Calgar
Knight-Captain Cata Sicarius
Librarian Karra Tigurius
Chaplain Ortania Cassius
Sister-Sergeant Toria Telion, Ultimarines 10th Company
Sister-Sergeant Antarine Chronus, Ultimarine Armor

Ultimarines 4th Company Field Command Ship Thunderhawk-class "Ptolemaios II"
Palatine (Knight-Captain) Anita King (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2037914&postcount=4426)
Palatine Keira Nightly
Palatine Ashley Snaper

Adepta Astarta: Black Templars
Kia Ein (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1816368&postcount=3379) - High Marshal of the Crusade

Celestial Being
Carym Garcia
Schach Nouera
Acous Verossa
Anita King
Kha der Kleriker
Saber
Artei Smirnov
Master Wodan
Chacha

Archangel-class Assault Carrier "Seraph"
Captain Sumire Takahashi
Morgraine Freeman
Prinny
Christian Cross
Milly Freeman

Anew Returner
Linda Freeman

Saint Guard: Outer Cadians
Aaron O. Spirly - @_@ Engineer
Commelius Artemis - Skull
Crash Anticoot - Engineer... But... <.<
Damien Kellis - Librarian
Fenix Phlare - Xenobiologist/Infirmary
Flamme Sparkson - Stores/Fanservice personel
Fredlich Aeon - Infirmary
Fuyuno Sora - Mechanic
Evangelia Tengouki - Melt
Gavin Tempest - Darksteel Chef
Ghazghkull'Mag'Uruk'Thraka - Destroid "Dah Warboss"
Jack "Goose" Anderson - Skull 1
Kageneko Mizubishie - Melt, has it hawts for Tee-Kay
Kriss Lanstar - Melt, Yakyuken Succubus
Kyral Banks - Skull
Lennon "LE-kun" Elton - Skull
Jason Lingo - Sensor 1
Lone Wolf - Monster Kaiser
Lowe Gear - Skull
Ilavesta von Einzbern - Communications
Reiji Tabihito - Sensor 2, Imouto-con
Ryand Smith - Skull
Saiga Nightengale - Skull 2
Sakuya Remily Hong - Meido of the Einherjar
Satchiel "Satty" Davion - Skull
Stephen "Space" Brothaal - Tactical Officer
Tormenk Steiner - Skull
T'Sho Uryuu - Engineering Psycho
Robert Zhang Tee-Kay - Einherjar Captain
M.A.C.R.O.S.S. Cadia

Eldritch

Akaitsuki no Arisa (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2094316&postcount=4750)/Burning Arisa - バーニング赤い月の王
Tsukihime Suzuka of the Lamb

Shrine of Maia
Autarch Moriyama Sensui "Shaiimaru"
Farseer Moriyama Mariko
Warlock Tabihito Hekate
Lord-General Moriyama Konda, Shiro no Hito

Scenarios:

Magical Lyrical BetrayerS
- SU Ratification (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1831973&postcount=3517)
- Chapter 1 Scene 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1835737&postcount=3562)
- Chapter 1 Scene 1.1 More Random Violence (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1835994&postcount=3567)
- Random short - Kiss of Death (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1871733&postcount=3725)

Epic Khrack
- Nighty's Siglio (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1001085&postcount=2234)

LoweGear

2008-05-19, 06:24

BEHOLD THE NEW WORLD!!!!

This will be my reference post for this thread, and as always will be updated with each work posted. :)

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Kaylin "Kay" Mathis [Rogue Archaelogist/Anthropologist/Historian]

http://i203.photobucket.com/albums/aa299/spec_operations/thKayTN.jpg

Main Profile (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=951871&postcount=208)
AI Profile: Asuka (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=955775&postcount=273)
AI Profile: Trivia (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=957400&postcount=295)
Final Thoughts (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=958931&postcount=347)

Stories
Zubaida Arc I (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1122479&postcount=8281)

Kay Stories: Confinement (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1571524&postcount=23999)

2nd Lieutenant Glock Heckler [TSAB Clerk, 79th Ground Battalion]

http://i203.photobucket.com/albums/aa299/spec_operations/thGlockTN.jpg

Main Profile Part I (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=960255&postcount=368)
Part II (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=960664&postcount=378)
Part III (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=960792&postcount=385)
Part IV (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=960882&postcount=391)
Part IV+ (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=961002&postcount=394)
Part V (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=962010&postcount=416)
Part VI (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=962273&postcount=429)
Part VII (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=962514&postcount=441)
Part VIII (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=963367&postcount=459)
Part IX (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=964824&postcount=516)
Part X (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=967527&postcount=626)
Part XI (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=968427&postcount=685)
Part XII (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=969687&postcount=723)
Part XIII (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=976071&postcount=916)
Part XIV (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=977640&postcount=1019)
Part XV (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=984178&postcount=1377)
Part XVI (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=990600&postcount=1670")
Visit (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1105713&postcount=6875)

Spell List Part I (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1208074&postcount=13312)
Spell List Part II (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1213585&postcount=13550)

Mai Enna [Codename "Hell Girl", Enforcer-in-training]

http://i203.photobucket.com/albums/aa299/spec_operations/thMai-EnnaTN.jpg

Introduction (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=993869&postcount=1844)
Part I (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=995319&postcount=1895)
Part II (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=996564&postcount=1970)
Part III (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=997906&postcount=2047)
Part IV (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=999787&postcount=2173)
Part V (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1002741&postcount=2376)

PAST

Part I (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1009141&postcount=2701)
Part II (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1010930&postcount=2779)
Part III (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1012502&postcount=2839)
Part III Gaiden (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1014091&postcount=2898)
Part IV (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1017671&postcount=3095)
Part V (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1021533&postcount=3273)
Part VI (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1022184&postcount=3364)
Part VII (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1023827&postcount=3501)
Part VIII (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1066445&postcount=5289)

FAMILIAR

Xealot (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=996315&postcount=1943)

Magic Circle

Midchilda Chaos Array (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=994951&postcount=1856)

Random

Image: Atashi no Yume (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1250045&postcount=15658)
Enforcer Exam I: Result (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1253556&postcount=15888)
Enforcer Exam II: Ponder (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1253819&postcount=15902)
Enforcer Exam III: Fall (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1255025&postcount=15965)
Enforcer Exam IV: Recorder (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1257420&postcount=16126)
Enforcer Exam V: Shelter (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1260726&postcount=16313)

Perfect Grade Chapters

Later (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2448985&postcount=7322)

LineBackerS
- Private First Class Remington Smith
- Private First Class Colt Wesson

http://i203.photobucket.com/albums/aa299/spec_operations/thLinebackersTN.jpg

Introduction (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1026788&postcount=3658)
Part I (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1030662&postcount=3824)
Part II (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1033627&postcount=3900)
Part III (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1035200&postcount=3963)
Part IV (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1039754&postcount=4188)
Part V (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1046064&postcount=4420)
Part VI (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1073300&postcount=5566)
Part VII (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1079103&postcount=5732)
Part VIII (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1109846&postcount=7293)

Device Profiles

Rhythm Edge - Goddess of the Azure Sky

Part I (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1052737&postcount=4695)
Part II (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1053007&postcount=4709)

Matsuri Miyama [Living Peacefully in Florida]

http://i203.photobucket.com/albums/aa299/spec_operations/untitled-2.jpg

Ai no Shinji

Part 1: Evening (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1130019&postcount=8768)
Part 2: Searcher (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1132276&postcount=8909)
Part 3: I.M. (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1133803&postcount=8975)
Part 4: Matsuri (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1135600&postcount=9043)
Part 5: Collision (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1137102&postcount=9117)
Part 6: Sunrise (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1140434&postcount=9380)
Part 7: Waiting (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1146275&postcount=9799)
Part 8: Breathing (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1151608&postcount=10181)
The Melancholy of Matsuri Miyama (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1156630&postcount=10605)

BELKARANGERS

Asagi Colwell [Fiery Adventurer BelkaRed]

http://i203.photobucket.com/albums/aa299/spec_operations/AsagiColwell23.jpg

History (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1381905&postcount=19273)
Spells and Abilities (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1385316&postcount=19372)
Special Moves and Techniques (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1388879&postcount=19464)
Miscellaneous Trivia (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1398267&postcount=19705)

Mayura Lee Labatt [Honest Heart BelkaYellow / Ebony Justice BelkaBlack]

http://i203.photobucket.com/albums/aa299/spec_operations/MayuraLabatt23.jpg

History (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1401058&postcount=19798)
Personality (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1401561&postcount=19816)
Weapons and Devices (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1404525&postcount=19886)
Spells and Abilities (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1410791&postcount=20176)
Special Moves and Trivia (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1414556&postcount=20347)

Julie Liu Ming [Blue Magician / Ninja of Ninja Belkablue]

http://i203.photobucket.com/albums/aa299/spec_operations/Julie.jpg

History (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1419717&postcount=20500)
Personality (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1423540&postcount=20661)
Barrier Jacket (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1428136&postcount=20857)
Skills and Devices (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1442622&postcount=21432)
Spell List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1451839&postcount=21845)
Special Moves and Trivia (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1456110&postcount=22032)

Worlds In a Nutshell: Celica (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1580180&postcount=24228)
TASK ONE: Prologue (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1524560&postcount=23327)
TASK ONE: PART ONE (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1528605&postcount=23402)

***

Epsila Synaisthima Labatt [The Shattered Girl]

http://i203.photobucket.com/albums/aa299/spec_operations/EpsilaTh.jpg

Main Profile (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=1484317#post1484317)
Attributes (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=1484803#post1484803)

***

Snippet: Arrival (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2111104&postcount=4785)
Snippet: Orange Quay (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2134006&postcount=4840)

EXCOM Intelligence Database:

EXCOM Primer (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2528853&postcount=7546)

PhoenixFlare

2008-05-19, 06:38

This will be my repost.

Mahou Shoujo Lyrical Nanoha, GuardianS

Chapter List

Prologue—Profeitin Shrifti
Scenes I to III (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1174179&postcount=11777)
Chapter One—Encounter
Scenes I to VI (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1186581&postcount=12393)
Chapter Two—The Warning
Scenes I to V (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1197888&postcount=12884)
Chapter Three—Leona
Scenes I to III (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1212243&postcount=13463)
Chapter Four—Escutcheon
Scenes I to III (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1244473&postcount=15287)
Scenes III (cont.) to V (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1244480&postcount=15288)
Scenes VI to VIII (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1246916&postcount=15409)
Chapter Five—Amethyst Star
Scenes I to VI (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1269462&postcount=16684)
Scenes VI (cont.) to V (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1269475&postcount=16685)
Transition, Part One—Trinity (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1330747&postcount=18234)
Chapter Six—Burden of the Past
Scenes I to III (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1413262&postcount=20302)
Scenes III (cont.) to V (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1413266&postcount=20304)
Scenes V (cont.) to VII (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1413271&postcount=20306)
Scenes VIII to IX (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1413282&postcount=20307)
Chapter Seven—A Tale from the Past
Scenes I to II (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1536279&postcount=23538)
Scenes III to IV (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1536281&postcount=23539
)
Chapter Eight—Rain and Sacrifice
Scenes I to IV (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1581666&postcount=24263)
Scenes IV (cont.) to V (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1581670&postcount=24264)
Scenes VI to VII (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1581782&postcount=24268)
Scenes VII (cont.) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1581785&postcount=24269)
Transition, Part Two—Avenger (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1607730&postcount=178)
Chapter Nine—Decisions
Scenes I to II (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1737650&postcount=2808)
Scene II (cont.) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1737655&postcount=2809)
Scenes III to IV (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1737661&postcount=2810)
Chapter Ten—The Shards of Truth (Part One)
Scenes I to II (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2047708&postcount=4532)
Scene III to V (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2047717&postcount=4533)
Scenes V (cont.) to VI (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2047723&postcount=4534)
Scenes VI (cont.) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2047726&postcount=4535)
Chapter Eleven—The Shards of Truth (Part Two)
Scene I (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2047730&postcount=4536)
Scene II (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2047734&postcount=4537)
Scenes II (cont.) to III (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2047740&postcount=4538)
Scenes IV (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2047748&postcount=4539)
Chapter Twelve—The Saint and the Devil (Part One)
Scenes I to II (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2599308&postcount=7928)
Scenes III to IV (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2599312&postcount=7929)
Scenes IV (cont.) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2599335&postcount=7930)
Scenes IV (cont.) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2599355&postcount=7931)

Character List

Special Investigation Corps 56, Intelligence Department
Leona Aurora Seraphina Tyriel (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1171759&postcount=11576)
Kratos Whitewing
Xeno Graymist
Gabriel Sunstrider
The Templars
???
Grandia Estrediel Paladien
Sharazad Estrediel Paladien
Vestrell Floriene
Trystahn Reynarth
The Magi
???
Lazarus Exoradeon – Archmagus of Apocalypse
Ardus Garuda – Magus of Pandemonium
Valtroth Bahamut – Magus of War
Goldiath Serpentear – Magus of Plague
Phelixys Damarein – Magus of Destruction
Melariel Mortis – Magus of Death
Hellecrys Amadeus – Magus of Catastrophe
Rubeus Ignisis – Magus of Holocaust
Barissia Nethremus – Magus of Desecration
Central Laboratories
Zakharov Alexei Chevaron

Reference List

Astral System (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1198963&postcount=12932)
Character Questionnaires
Leona Aurora Seraphina Tyriel (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1197713&postcount=12868)

Comartemis

2008-05-19, 07:22

And this shall be my reference post for future posts and reference material.

...

Kinda depressingly empty at the moment though.

Time to fix that!

*EDIT*
Fixed!

Hell's Angels, Independent Enforcer Unit

Vivio Takamachi, Angel 01, Front Attacker
Iris Kingswood, Angel 02, Center Guard
Rex "Hotshot" Atkins (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1633362&postcount=815), Angel 03, Fullback

Kyral

2008-05-19, 07:37

I copy this post from the old thread as I'm not able anymore to change it there.

Here is everything I've written so far:

Characters:
Elric Thorn (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1218300&postcount=13824)
Rinya Shuri A'Kalash (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1259661&postcount=16262)

Memories of Blood and Sorrow:

Part 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1241757&postcount=15130) (Part 0 in the old thread)
Part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1251016&postcount=15725) (Part 1 in the old thread)
Part 3 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1448177&postcount=21780) (Part 2 in the old thread)
Part 4 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1623553&postcount=549)
Part 5 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1700332&postcount=2291)
Part 6 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1767027&postcount=3098)
Part 7 I (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2027504&postcount=4376)
Part 7 II (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2152442&postcount=4913)
Part 8 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2290103&postcount=5764)
Part 9 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2405741&postcount=7185)

Nightfall - a MGLN Dark Future Setting:

Darkness Overwhelming (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1276092&postcount=16975)
The Corruption (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1363504&postcount=18942)
Chapter 3 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1579985&postcount=24219)
Chapter 4 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2043683&postcount=4464)
Chapter 5 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2285471&postcount=5661)
Chapter 6 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2350440&postcount=6639)

Random Story Stuff

A free day (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1818366&postcount=3400)

4komas

"Dark Powers" a Nightfall 4koma (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1853984&postcount=3665)
Women are scary (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2162566&postcount=4944)
The Elrika Chapters - 01 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2308386&postcount=5983)
The Elrika Chapters - 02 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2326275&postcount=6239)
The Elrika Chapters - 03 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2528677&postcount=7543)

Random Picture Stuff

A photoshopped fanart showing Elric and his 'harem' (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1633119&postcount=808) :heh:
A better picture of Elrics Barrier Jacket (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1681413&postcount=1913)
A picture of Elric, inspired by Kiseki Himura's "MGLN BetrayerS" doujinshi (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1841144&postcount=3616)
Elric, Syn and Vivio eating ice cream + pissed Rinya. (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1869079&postcount=3702)
Elric in 4 phases of his life (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2203562&postcount=5257)
Elrics newest Barrier Jacket design (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2296483&postcount=5840)
Rinya featuring her white colored uniform (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2317254&postcount=6187)
The post with a new picture of Rinya wearing her Knight Armour (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2355491&postcount=6673)
Lyria & Rem from MoBS (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2406546&postcount=7189)
Nightfall Sketch Art of Neltharion (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2624438&postcount=8104)
Nightfall Sketch Art of Ireul (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2707282&postcount=8413)

Other

A general survey about TSAB uniforms (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2302248&postcount=5930)

Notes:
- I changed the part numbers of my main story from 0-3 to 1-4. It makes more sense that way.

Sheba

2008-05-19, 08:12

My simple OCs:

Some members of the TSAB Intelligence Department

Roland Rafale (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1383776&postcount=19333)

Diana Dornier (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1547064&postcount=23703)

TSAB Navy Recon and Exploration Cell - The Conquistadores

Kyoya Kibagami, the leader (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1421820&postcount=20614)

Pranee Chamlong, the cook (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1437118&postcount=21189)

Sieraza, Pranee's familiar who used to be a thief and a musician. (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1437125&postcount=21190)

Antigone Kolokouri, mage and scholar with her staple summon, Arngrim (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1470047&postcount=22301)

Ynana, the ship operator. And last member of her specie. (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1478611&postcount=22485)

Non-aligned characters

Morgan de Havilland, pirate. (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1505791&postcount=22801)

Wild Goose

2008-05-19, 08:47

Okay, here's the proper story list post for the OFM fics; I'll continually update it and Ghaz can link it to the main page.

A little bit of backstory is in order; around August 2007, Kagerou approached me and told me that he was taking a group I had created (a PMC of magic users) and was porting it over to the Nanoverse, having recently discovered Outer Cadia. We both worked on the OFM's history, ideas and backstory, building up things, with a bit of give and take in our approaches (Kagerou favored more fantasy-ish elements, I was a more mil-sf/tactical/hot blooded approach to things). The OFM was our joint project until Kagerou moved on to real life, so that's why some links will be written by me and some by Kagerou.

In brief, the Order of Freelance Mages are the TSAB's blackops people. Anything secret, anything black, anything that can't see the light of day: these are the guys and girls who do the TSAB's dirty work.

What is the OFM?
OFM Primer (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1273164&postcount=16809)

The Erusian War of Subjugation (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1253493&postcount=15884)

Briefing Document/OFM Overview
(http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1395083&postcount=19629)

Why does the Order use conventional weapons?

When the OFM infiltrates a non-administrated world on a mission, they go in very deep undercover. Think Special Forces in Afghanistan among Pashtun undercover. In those circumstances, there will be situations where not having a gun can create very unpleasant and uncomfortable circumstances - people will wonder why the hell you are not carrying a gun. (Especially in gun-happy cultures - again, like the Afghans and the Pashtun).

Secondly, while a non-admistrated world may not have the ability to detect the magical usage, it can still detect the magical effects. Look at MSLN and A's; each time Nanoha & Co use spells, there are all sorts of effects; the hugeass tree that grew in the middle of Uminari, for instance, the huge Divine Buster beam she fired... one large weakness of the Mid-Childa and Belkan styles is that because you've got the loud noise of the casting cirlce/triangle, plus the bright glows, and the beams: you can't be stealthy if you use magic - and the OFM is primarily a stealth-based unit. Like the SAS and Delta Force and other special forces, they will inevitably end up blowing up stuff at some point, but they do so as stealthily as possible, without raising weird questions.

Third: This ties into the reason why US Special Forces will at times use AK-47s in the field instead of HK416s, SIG 552s or M4A1s: when you want to be black and deniable, you use weapons available in that area that the enemy uses so as to throw them off track. To give a modern example, suppose Delta had an op in Iran. They come in using M468s and the Remington 6.8mm round, make their supressed shots, police their brass, and hightail it out. No one has detected their presence. But later, when investigating teams comb the bodies, they will find the 6.8mm rounds used by SOCOM units in the bodies. And if one Delta Operator misses just one shell casing, that discovered casing can lead investigators back to Uncle Sam. But if they used AK-47s or local weapons with generic ammo... then they'd throw the investigators off-track.

To give another example: Let's say that Ivanovich has is doing a redux of his "graduation excercise." He's going to snipe a corrupt official in a car. Now, suppose he uses his Rifle Device Harvest to do so, on a world that is at 20th century tech levels. He'll fire a powerful green beam that will light up the night, which will slam into the target's car, and blow it up... and when investigators examine the car the next day, they will observe that the damage is nothing like they've ever seen before, and then they'll start to wonder about just how the hell somebody made a man-portable beam weapon which hasn't been worked out yet. But if he were to use his conventional sniper rifle, then it'd be easier for the investigators to accept, and easier for the OFM to cover their tracks. It's easier to explain away a 14.5mm rifle round than an energy beam.

Fourth: The OFM operates black, to allow O'Neill and Special Operations plausible deniability. As such, they have to take actions that will not be detected by the TSAB proper, thus limiting their usage of magic (meaning that barriers to mask magical discharges are out - and pointless, really, since it moves the mage out of synch with time and normal humans, who are almost always the targets. When everything goes right, such as in Snatch & Grab, there's no problem; but sometimes, as in Platinum Lucifer/Silver Angel, OFM mages may be forced to "break protocol"; when that happens, O'Neill and Leti will help to cover for them, but there's a limit to how much cover a Lt. General and an Admiral can do, and they can't be covering for the OFM all the time.

Fifth: If Ivanovich has to assasinate someone, he'll use it with his rifle, the same rifle he scored his graduation kill with. Because he's the Sergeant Major, he's one of the most experienced and skilled snipers in the TSAB, and because he's that badass. (His magical affinity is for "Real Man Badass", afterall. XD)

The People:

Erick von Long, Commander of the Order (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1248331&postcount=15547)
- Spell List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1248492&postcount=15558)

Glen Schattenmann, Executive Officer of the Order (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1250058&postcount=15660)
- Spell List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1250400&postcount=15686)
- Id (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1251798&postcount=15764)

Emili Nailo, Officer of the Order (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1253350&postcount=15866)
- Spell List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1253454&postcount=15880)

Franz Jaeger, Platoon Commander of the Order (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1949502&postcount=3977)
- Skillset & Spell List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1505789&postcount=22800)
- Relationships (In progress)

A.J. Ivanovich, Sergeant Major of the Order (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1255460&postcount=16004)
- Spell List
(http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1262468&postcount=16408)
Naomi Jaeger, Aerial Mage of the Order (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1277325&postcount=17036)
- Spell List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1277497&postcount=17047)

Master Chief John-117, Non Comissioned Officer of the Order (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1363351&postcount=18939)
- Abilities, Skills, & Spell List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1366960&postcount=18998)

Mikhail Dornitz, Intelligence Officer of the Order (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1348256&postcount=18640)

The Gear:
Type-G3C Barrier Jacket / Ghost Armor (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1364855&postcount=18962)
Type-ODST Barrier Jacket (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1730970&postcount=2649)

Entropy through Order: From the files of the Order of Freelance Mages:

Intro pieces: (Alpha Canon)
200th Hour (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1341170&postcount=18471) (MC0072: Naomi experiences her 200th hour during a training excercise)
Platinum Lucifer/Silver Angel (Emili on a black op gone wrong) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1274969&postcount=16916)
Ash to Ash (Glen vs Signum) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1263784&postcount=16459)
Elevation (Erick assasinating a corrupt TSAB official) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1260459&postcount=16296)
Five Minutes to Lose, pt. 1 (Franz is "befriended" by Nanoha) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1247812&postcount=15521)
Five Minutes to Lose, pt. 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1249069&postcount=15602)

==================
Operations:
Sorairo Days -- First Arc: The Light Before We Land (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1283572&postcount=17303)
Sorairo Days -- Second Arc: Sky-colored (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1307178&postcount=17945)
Sorairo Days -- Third Arc: Liberation of Belzac, Part 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1335190&postcount=18339)
Sorairo Days -- Third Arc: Liberation of Belzac, Part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1347227&postcount=18618)
Snatch & Grab (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1267114&postcount=16611) (Ivanovich and Franz lead Bravo Squad, Assault Platoon, in capturing TSAB traitor Vincenza Blueno)

====================
Light Hearts, Hot Blood, Crack, and Lulz (Semi-canon, not directly affecting Alpha)
Don't Ask, Don't Tell (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1497647&postcount=22664) (Misunderstandings on relationships)
Three guys and a bottle of Vodka (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1348256&postcount=18640)(Franz and Mikhail receive an unexpected old friend while drinking)
PT is lotsa fun...Right? (Franz and the Assault Platoon enage in epic lulz during PT) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1274177&postcount=16865)

====================
Crack:
On Call (An OFM mage cancels Valentines plans to respond to a terrorist threat) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1329812&postcount=18223)

For those interested, the OFM's influences were, in no particular order: Delta Force, SAS, SEAL Team Six, ODST Marines, ONI.

Melodius Trueheart

2008-05-19, 08:52

This is my contribution so far:

The Lords of Remnant Belka (Belkarum Herrenritter)

Alejandro De Sevilla, Verdus Seraphus (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1573514&postcount=24052)

Yeshu Malkanies, Herren des Schallen (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1397136&postcount=19682)

Vivali Zeltisberg, Magus Pontifex Belkarum (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=1580243#post1580243)

Sanctus Remnant Belkarum General Issue:

Magnus Tollerman (w.i.p.)

FieryAeon

2008-05-19, 09:34

This shall be my OC depositary, regardless the fact that I'm no longer all that active anyway. :uhoh:

Itsuki (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1145533&postcount=9755)
Jean Sneijder (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1150389&postcount=10093)
Sylvia Bannes (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1159609&postcount=10757)
Fel Rilifane (w.i.p) (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1263376&postcount=16448)

Tempest Dynasty

2008-05-19, 10:38

I claim this spot for my use. I'll have more in the future.

=========================

Characters:

The Knight of Calamity - Noland Reiniger (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1618350&postcount=384)
The Knight of Two ver. (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2395895&postcount=7111)

The Guardian of the World - Solomon (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2516846&postcount=7473)

The Ordinary Iron Chef - Kevin (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1806871&postcount=3360)

The Knight's Sisters - Cecilia and Remilia (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2046881&postcount=4515)

=========================

Stories:

The Gospel of Judas

Chapter 1: The Darkness Act 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1694157&postcount=2143)
Act 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1828275&postcount=3478)
Act 3 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2179900&postcount=5062)
Act 4 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2179931&postcount=5063)

Chapter 2: The Terror of Death
Act 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2429242&postcount=7256)
Act 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2547083&postcount=7711)

Food for Thought

First Course Chapter 1: Not a Bad Egg (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2022920&postcount=4348)
Chapter 2: Spring and Pasta (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2549550&postcount=7730)

Obligatory Timewarp Episode

First Paradox (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=2234042#post2234042)
Second Paradox

Random Pairing Shorts

Untitled (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2201013&postcount=5224) (Keroko)
Untitled 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2257022&postcount=5539) (Nanoha)
Pocky (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2269585&postcount=5602) (Keroko)
Costume Design (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2282301&postcount=5655) (Hayate)
Training Day (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2304938&postcount=5955) (Fate)
Carnival
Bedtime (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2661415&postcount=8277)
Saint's Day (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2364665&postcount=6773) (???)
Crisis (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2462951&postcount=7332)

Shorts

Phenoptosis (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1785809&postcount=7890)
Southern Cross (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1904840&postcount=3814)
Northern Lights (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1925321&postcount=3921)
Final Act (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1918063&postcount=3890)
Locked Girl (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2031410&postcount=10510)

Nightengale

2008-05-19, 10:55

Wha- Whai-

This destroys my half-completed backlog breaker from Outer Cadia Ein. ;_;

... meh, whatever.

~~~

This will be my reference post.

(Old OC List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1089382&postcount=6173))

Before Nanoha: Chronicles of Gil Graham
~Magical Boy Classical Graham~

~Magical Boy Classical Graham : BeginningS~

Artificial Receptionary Intelligence Android Type-Weapon/A.R.I.A (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=939861&postcount=48)

~Magical Boy Classical Graham : Aces~

Florentina “Flora” Chrysler Lieze (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=941532&postcount=70)

~Magical Boy Classical Graham : AdmiralS~

On indefinite hold

Belka Ataraxia Romance
~Before Saga~

Background Trivia: A Belkan fanon historical context: chapter 1: Velka: The Birth of 2 Kingdoms (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=944691&postcount=141), chapter 2: Velka: The Desert Empire (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=952560&postcount=226)
Isdera Saleen (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=968220&postcount=675)
Wira Res-Brusche (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=969385&postcount=706)
Astra Sol-Kry-Ea (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=970530&postcount=749)

~Saga of Saga~
Saga (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=970804&postcount=755)
~AFTER Saga~
Future Zerstroritter (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1056026&postcount=4861)

TSAB : Behind the Light of AceS and StrikerS

Joseth Hai Ma bin Kasim (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1089382&postcount=6173)
Austin Gloster Abrams (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1041304&postcount=4247)
Akira Schneider Hibiki (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1101214&postcount=6706)
Dranac Pars Hibiki (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1101214&postcount=6706)

Unknown

Zone (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=964797&postcount=511)
Hona Zwei Fuwa (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=957611&postcount=298)
Zerria Scaglietti (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1102631&postcount=6757)
- Character Bio part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1111895&postcount=7501)
Juliet Scaglietti (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1106347&postcount=6959)

~~~

Though honestly, it's be much appreciated if this old compilation (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1089382&postcount=6173) could be transfered here instead. -_-

Nighty, reporting...

--------------------------------

Before Nanoha : Chronicles of Gil Graham
~Magical Boy Classical Graham~

A.R.I.A
[Artificial Receptionary Intelligence Android Type-Weapon]

Story of Aria (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=939861&postcount=48)

Florentina "Flora" Chrysler Lieze
[TSAB Rear Admiral, Dimensional Navy Fleet]

Story of Flora (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=941532&postcount=70)

--------------------------------

BEFORE Saga
~Before the Preludes of Tragedy~

Before Belka

Birth of Belka : A Separation From Mid-Childa:
Chapter I: Belka: The Birth of 2 Kingdoms (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=944691&postcount=141)
Chapter II: Belka: The Desert Empire (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=952560&postcount=226)

Before Zerstroritter

Isdera Saleen (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=968220&postcount=675) [Sword Knight of Belka]

Wira Res-Brusche (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=969385&postcount=706) [Guardian Beast Knight of Belka]

Astra Sol-Kry-Ea (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=970530&postcount=749) [Shield Wind of Belka]

--------------------------------

SAGA of Saga
~The Belkan Ataraxia Romance of the Night Sky~

Saga [The Knight of the Night Sky]

Null [The Blessed Wind of Saga]

Part I (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=970804&postcount=755)
Part II (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=972327&postcount=805)
Part III (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=973607&postcount=829)
Part III-2nd (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=975642&postcount=889)
Part III-Final (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=975849&postcount=904)
Part IV (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=977038&postcount=961)
Part ZERO : Future (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=977701&postcount=1022)
Part V (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=978737&postcount=1057)
Part VI (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=980264&postcount=1133)
Part VII (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=982377&postcount=1226)
Part VIII (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=983624&postcount=1313)
Part IX (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=987004&postcount=1549)
Part IX-2nd (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=988768&postcount=1611)
Part IX-3rd (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=990646&postcount=1674)
Part IX-Final (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=992110&postcount=1730)
Part X (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=993596&postcount=1812)
Part XI (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=997169&postcount=2012)
Part XII (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1000604&postcount=2210)
Part XII-2nd (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1001085&postcount=2234)
Part XII-3rd (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1002419&postcount=2328)
Part XII-4th (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1002737&postcount=2375)
Part XII-5th (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1004071&postcount=2457)
Part XII-6th (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1004730&postcount=2486)
Part XII-Final (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1006194&postcount=2581)
Part XIII (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1010287&postcount=2744)
Part XIII-2nd (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1010752&postcount=2770)
Part XIII-Final (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1012369&postcount=2835)
Part XIV (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1017841&postcount=3099)
Part XIV-2nd (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1019067&postcount=3158)
Part XIV FINAL (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1020570&postcount=3240)
Epilogue 0 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1021938&postcount=3318)
Epilogue I (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1022257&postcount=3376)
Epilogue II (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1025444&postcount=3594)
Epilogue FINAL (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1030769&postcount=3825)

--------------------------------

AFTER Saga
~A Story of Promise of Time Immemorial~

Future Zerstroritter [Ancient Knights under the Present Skies]

Part ZERO (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1056026&postcount=4861)
Part I (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1059473&postcount=5008)
Part II (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1064395&postcount=5218)
Part II-Final (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1066139&postcount=5281)
Part III (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1069737&postcount=5390)
Part IV (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1082540&postcount=5900)
Part IV-Final (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1083758&postcount=5927)

~Side Isdera AFTER : Zest vs Isdera

Complete (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1267456&postcount=16630)

~Blank of 6 Months~ [A Different Path]

Pilot Chapter (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1399837&postcount=19753)

--------------------------------

TSAB : Behind the Light of AceS and StrikerS
~There are always those who exist beyond what we seel~

Joseth Hai-Ma bin Kassim
[TSAB Intelligence Officer, Intelligence Dept.]

Story I (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=987159&postcount=1567)
Story II (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1005641&postcount=2555)
Story III (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1027015&postcount=3679)
Story IV (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1045767&postcount=4396)

Austin Gloster Abrams
[TSAB Air Force Drill Instructor, Ground-Agressor]

Profile (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1041304&postcount=4247)

--------------------------------

UNKNOWN
~Who...are...you?~

Zone (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=964797&postcount=511) [Dimensional Pirate]

Hona Zwei Fuwa (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=957611&postcount=298) [On Hold Indefinitely]

SpaceBrotha

2008-05-19, 11:01

Index post.

The fic is still unnamed, i'll see about the name after i've introduced the last main OC of the story :p

Chapter 1: Prologue (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=1523941#post1523941)
Chapter 2: The Tower (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=1541063#post1541063)
Chapter 3: Time in the World (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=1582035#post1582035)
Chapter 4: Light at the End of the Tunnel (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1621575&postcount=521)
Chapter 5: eeeh, at some point :p

LimitedEternal

2008-05-19, 11:52

*waves*

Doesn't feel any different, does it? :3

I guess I'll stake my claim here, then:

Complete Works:
Asuka Ikari Tsukuyomi (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1150600&postcount=10100)

Works In Progress:
As-yet-unnamed OC

Planned short involving one or other of the above...

Assuming I'm not completely lazy, I'll keep this up to date. :3
*hoists the flag of Cadia*

Saint X

2008-05-19, 12:20

A lone Mobile Constrcution Vehicle stops in the middle of an area called Neo-Cadia.

The land is flat, with lush growth all around- wild and uncivilized land...

Perfect for a new beginning...

"Finally, A Place worthy of the Saint..."

Saint X Productions
Character and Idea Vault

Premises of the Multiverse:

The Zoning of the Multiverse (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1605063&postcount=119)

The Galactic Defense Initiative and why they "do not exist".

Premises of Ordered Space:

Midea: The 1st Administrated World. "The 'Mid' in Midchilda".

Childea: The 2nd Administrated World. "The 'Childa' in Midchilda".

Guardia: The 14th Administrated World. "The Home of the Organic Unison Devices "Edel Raids".

Ritardia: The 24th Administrated World. "The Home of the Linear Magic System".

Jurai of Post-Yosho Dynasty Period: The 26th Administrated World.

Premises of other Worlds

The Advanced Esotherics Union or AEU: Home of the Dei Magical System.

The Earth Situation

Earl: A Bureau Associated World

Unsorted / Trial Concepts:

Sorted / Proper OCs:

Reclamation Utilities Commission

Tsubame Tsuvaiela (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1888675&postcount=3797)

Time Space Administration Bureau

Ashton Marten Mcdouglas (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1038023&postcount=4106)
Kyla Scrya (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1054634&postcount=4781)
Rurika (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1064472&postcount=5223)
CC (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=974072&postcount=839)
Minerva (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=975861&postcount=905)
Chacha (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=975861&postcount=905)
Exelica (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2294558&postcount=5818)
Crueltear (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2295944&postcount=5832)
Faintear (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2307675&postcount=5979)
C'runa (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2309688&postcount=5996)

Civilians

Night Mintra Estel de Danaan (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=986807&postcount=1526)
Reverie (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1021474&postcount=3267)
Kallan Iquilanas (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1789215&postcount=3312)

Galactic Defense Initiative

Andrei Ilanovich Antonov (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=996532&postcount=1965)
Axelle (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1091196&postcount=6227)

Other Concepts:

The Key Devices (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1106416&postcount=6968)

Construction in Progress

PS: will edit later

ghazghkull

2008-05-19, 12:58

Well, here's a minor redux of Hayato's profile

Name: Hayashi, Hayato
Gender: Male
Date of Birth: July 6 MC0066
Age: 16 (as of MC0082)
Height: 5’ 5”
Mage Rank: C
Affiliation: TSAB
Rank: Corporal (as of September 8 MC0083)
PFC (Private First Class)

Personality: Hayato for all intents and purpose is a brash, hot-headed young man who prefers to shoot and ask questions later; however, is a brilliant tactician. Capable of thinking on the fly, he was often fielded as the second in command of any teams he had been assigned to during his time at the Academy.

However, his strong preference towards combat has left many of his instructors wary of his future career, due to the fact the TSAB for all intents and purposes was a peace keeping forcing that did not like to resort to violence, despite the number of various powerful weapons they had at their disposal. With that said, despite his strong penchant for combat, he does know when to just settle back, and enjoy the peace, especially whenever he’s around close friends or family.

Magic type: Neo-Belka
Magic color: White

Assignment: Hammer 05 of Riot Force 6, under the command of Captain Reddo Farukon

History

Although born on Mid-Childa, his lineage points out that his family at one point had been from Earth, otherwise known as Non-Administered Planet 97. Coming from a family of military officers, which included his mother and father who were, and presently still in the Navy, and his older sister in the Army, he and his younger brother also enrolled into the Academy.

His strong preference for battle had been born, partly due to his already growing love for gun-type devices, notably used by Enforcer Tiana Lanstar. Also a practitioner of some form of martial arts, coupled with his affinity for guns, he and his siblings also ended up developing a combat style using pistols that he called Gun Kata (More details below).

Having just graduated from the Academy himself, and his brother two years below, and his sister 6 years into the service, and having already gone through various assignments, he knew he had a long way to go before he would be able to truly test out how far he could go.

Appearance

http://img231.imageshack.us/img231/9186/hayato2kf7.jpg

Barrier Jacket

The jacket is composed of the following:
A green Kevlar vest, with the main AI core resting over his heart
White t-shirt
Black fingerless gloves
Green camouflage-pants
Black combat boots
Black vambraces that also carry the pistols, which are also, part of the Device itself

Device:

Device Name: Gundober

Battle Form
http://img222.imageshack.us/img222/6087/socomleftfa5.jpghttp://img222.imageshack.us/img222/6547/socomrightwe9.jpg

The device itself is the vest that Hayato wears, which are connected to the vambraces he wears on his forearms, which therefore connects to the pistols. Although the pistols themselves use magazine clips in which 6 of them are stored inside the vest, Gundober itself has two chambers of its own, located on either shoulders. The purpose of those two is simply to boost the combat prowess of the user, or to provide a power boost, whichever is required. The magazine for the pistols themselves can hold a fair amount of cartridges; however, the number is restricted to the length of the magazine clip itself.

Gundober itself can store up to 6 additional clips, on top of the two clips that are always preloaded into the pistols themselves.

Combat Style

Gun Kata: The style in its most general form revolves around close range combat using nothing more than pistols. For all intents and purposes, the most basic form is only a defensive stance used when the user is forced into a position where close combat melee would normally prevail. The form involves a strong knowledge of martial arts in which to either deflect weapons before they are fired, or to disable the opponent and take their weapon to be used against them.

However, the stances all require a strong personal core which includes good footwork and dexterity required for the more advanced stances, due to the fluidity of movement required in order to flow from one attack sequence to the next.

In terms of stance, the approach is like that of martial arts, rather than the style that Ace Takamachi Nanoha and Enforce Lanstar Tiana use, due to the fact they dig themselves in. Gun Kata in general requires the user to have a solid footing, but ready to immediately react and relocate to find new firing lines and arcs, and obtain the maximum coverage from a salvo. The range of the style lies between point blank and 10 meters.

Positioning of the arms is also critical. Misalignment of the arms can possibly risk injury of the hands, wrists, and elbows, and possibly the bones themselves, due to possible awkward positioning when alignment is achieved. (Refer to Tracer Stance Form 1 for further explanation of ‘alignment’) Awkward positioning will not only lead to discomfort for the user, but also if the shooter fires, the recoil would potentially injure the user. In addition, the style is intended to be a two-handed combat style in order to maximize the number of shots per unit of time.

Below is a listing of the known stances created, to date.

Stances:

Basic Stance:

The most basic of all the known stances Hayato and his siblings have created. For all intents and purposes, it is strictly defensive, however, the number of opponents has to be at a low number, or otherwise the stance is useless, leaving the user vulnerable.

Below is a video explanation of the stance. This is not to be confused with the more aggressive Tracer Stance.

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Tracer Stance

Form 1:
The primarily used stance, it employs the use of Tracer Spheres (Look at spell section), which are formed prior to entering combat. This form uses only two Spheres, supported and directly controlled by the caster. However, with a device it is possible the device may operate the Spheres. The purpose of the spheres is to act as a guide for the user as they act as a second eye. The form revolves consistent moving in order to dodge and evade enemy fire. The style is employed in combination with the user’s pistols; the left and right hand pistols are homed in on one of the two spheres, which then move around to assist forming firing arcs for the user.

When practiced, the guns are configured to align with the sphere they are set to home into, therefore, eliminating the need to aim, to a certain degree, permitting the user to fire over his or her back, without ever looking behind.

The Tracers themselves function as markers, designed to come into contact with enemy target and mark them for termination, before moving on to mark another target.

Form 2:
A more difficult stance to use, which requires two people, a device, or a user that is capable of supporting the amount of power required. The form revolves using 8 Tracer Sphere’s, and a manual alignment.

The form is used by allowing the 8 Tracers to fly independently, or is operated by the device, marking enemy targets as they fly. Due to the fact the alignment becomes manual, the user must be able to move around the battlefield, and be able to align their weapon to a marker and fire, with little to no hesitation.

In terms of how the user knows the weapon is aligned, when the gun momentarily locks in a certain position, the user knows that the gun has achieved alignment with one of the markers placed by the spheres, and would therefore fire, releasing the lock, as the charge would then be homed in on the marker.

Striker Stance

To be re-evaluated for explanation

Spells

Tracer Sphere: The spell creates a simple energy ball. The formation itself takes very little time and energy, often taking nothing more than 3 seconds to create. The purpose is to act as a placer of homing beacon for the trackers built into the sight of the device, to achieve maximum alignment, with minimal deviation.

In terms of just one person, the caster can support at most two, due to the limitations the mind can handle, in a combat situation.

In a team of two, the supporter may act as the controller for the spheres, up to 8.

In the Striker Stance, the number of spheres created is based on the limitations of the user’s output capabilities.

The Tracer’s primary operation is to have the weapons they are linked to home on them, the moment they have made contact with an enemy target, which are designated by the device or the caster, placing a tracer, which emits the same energy signature the guns are traced on, permitting the gun to achieve a lock.

Strike Shot: To facilitate the need of a sniper rifle to a limited degree, the user discharged a minimum of 3 cartridges in order to use the stored energy and compress it into a tight, narrow cylinder of energy. This is done in order to ensure the strike will achieve the desired range required to strike the target. However, additional cartridges, or an entire clip, may be expended in order to achieve the greatest distance possible, or to cause additional damage from the shot. The distance that can be seen, however, is limited to the sight of the user.

Flak Armour: A low grade auto-defence, Flak Armour at best is meant to block and possibly deflect low class attacks. Anything greater will shatter the shield.

Stun Reflex: A passively active spell, the purpose of this spell is to prevent accidental injury or death of fellow officers or team-mates. Unless indicated otherwise, the spell remains active. The spell immediately goes active when the user draws one of the pistols from the holsters on the vambraces. If they are drawn reflexively, the pistols will discharge a low-power stun shot, providing the user enough time to determine whether the person they have shot is a friendly or not.

Tormenk

2008-05-19, 13:20

Tankor, Pulverize!

Ehem. Sorry.

Tormenk, standing by..

Index post, as said above. Updated when more crack stuff is written and posted here. :)

P.S.: Images are there to provide a visual basis. In no way are the characters ports of the image themselves. And don't sue the guy who can't draw for using images he finds nice. :p

~~~

Neutral Entities

Katrina

[Young Noble "Silver Siren"]

[Prideful Mage "Crimson Herald"]

[Reluctant Immortal "Beholder of Regret"]

http://i223.photobucket.com/albums/dd217/mitsuki_tk/Avie.jpg

- An enigmatic young girl, her past is only known by a select few.

profile
(http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1531946&postcount=23450)

The Storyteller

W.I.P

The Prize

Gen Ealin [Rouge Enforcer "Black Fist"]

http://i223.photobucket.com/albums/dd217/mitsuki_tk/gauron.jpg

- A man who holds a deep grudge towards the TSAB, the former Enforcer joins the Prize after exacting his revenge.

profile (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1487604&postcount=22593)

Prizes of the Deck

Jac Kell [Silent Killer "The Jackal"]

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- Quiet and unwavering, hidden motives guide his actions. Coldly efficient, he is the leader of the Jacks, an all-purpose group of mages within the Prize.

profile (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1487604&postcount=22593)

G.J.Jag ["Azure Storm"]

http://i223.photobucket.com/albums/dd217/mitsuki_tk/Jag.png

- Scarred by a rough childhood, he is defined by his instinct to survive.

profile (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1487604&postcount=22593)

Jas Ellen ["Dead-aim Markswoman"]

http://i223.photobucket.com/albums/dd217/mitsuki_tk/Jas.png

- An runaway that struggles to establish her worth while looking for the touch she never had.

profile (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1509635&postcount=22929)

Jec [ Girl of Tragedies "False Apostle"]

http://i223.photobucket.com/albums/dd217/mitsuki_tk/Yin.png

- Raised by the organization that murdered her family, the young girl follows the path that has been set for her.

profile (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1509635&postcount=22929)

Random drabbles/oneshots

Perspective (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1218903&postcount=13850)
Katrina ponders about the road a certain Deathwing was travelled thus far and where it will lead to.

Twisting of Fate (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1221675&postcount=13981)
Without the strength of words, Fate stains her blade red in blood.

Guilt (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1297706&postcount=17705)
Megane recalls the end of her life as she knew back then, and a living part of her nightmare comes back to haunt her.

~~~

the old index post (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=1227652#post1227652), if anyone's interested.

On a after thought, perhaps I'll add in daemon Mai crack and Vivio's visit to the demented dentist. Though both counts as crack right now. :heh:

Skyfall

2008-05-19, 13:36

Though honestly, it's be much appreciated if this old compilation (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1089382&postcount=6173) could be transfered here instead. -_-

Done, i added all the information to your post above. Or did you want it as a separate post ? that is doable as well; i said i am open to requests regarding the "thread switch" ;)

ghazghkull

2008-05-19, 14:08

Well this is joyous @.@

People are transferring over fairly fast :3

Evangelion Xgouki

2008-05-19, 15:04

Divisions

Division 66 (NERV)
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v43/EvaUnit0X/OC/Nervlogo.jpg

Profile (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1384383&postcount=19359)

-Stories
Settling In (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1414212&postcount=20331)
Double Action (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1439731&postcount=21324)
Masked Rider System (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1527505&postcount=23370)
In the Shadows (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1817213&postcount=3391)

Characters

1st Lt. Shamsel Nagisa
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v43/EvaUnit0X/OC/ShamselID.jpg

Profile (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1200471&postcount=12998)
Spell List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1232699&postcount=14588)

-Stories
Reporting In (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1204731&postcount=13187)
Early Reflections (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1210382&postcount=13399)
Dreams (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1237163&postcount=14850)
The Scars We Bear (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1257168&postcount=16110)
A Piece of the Past (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1263739&postcount=16457)
A 'Normal' Day (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1287924&postcount=17435)
My Partner (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1297135&postcount=17691)
Darkness Within, pt. 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1539994&postcount=23658)

2nd Lt. Ryotaro Nogami
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v43/EvaUnit0X/OC/RyotaroID.jpg

Profile (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1369710&postcount=19047)
Spell List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1424770&postcount=20729)

-Stories
Demonstration (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1382865&postcount=19292)

1st Lt. Evangeline 'Tsurugi' Kamishiro
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v43/EvaUnit0X/OC/EvangelineID.jpg

Profile (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1520144&postcount=23246)
Spell List (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1524589&postcount=23329)

-Stories
Arrival (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1535501&postcount=23506)
Remembrance (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1881284&postcount=3737)

Master Sergeant Megumi Kurenai

Profile (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2163383&postcount=4955)

-Stories
Crimson Meetings, pt 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2211827&postcount=5309)

Evangelion Xgouki

2008-05-19, 15:39

MCV reporting

*MCV screeches to a halt on the new territory with armed escort*

"Alright, deploy it here and start construction ASAP! Let's get this new base up and runnin' people!"

[Master Arm Locked]

Considering the initial concept, I kinda feel this next scenario is somewhat... rushed. Then again it wasn't meant to be long so...

Presenting a short humble scenario entitled:

*snip*

Very cute bit there :nod:. Haven't seen Mai and S&W in a while. Glad to see their getting some fic time :p

Oh, and Kansetsu Kissu FTW!!!!! :D :D

He's just acting up because he found out that he's going to get shafted in Macross OC, even though he's the only person with charecter shields.:p

Right, anybody else wanting to be in Macross OC, speak now or forever hold your peace (and get pwnt by DELICIOUS CULTURE).

Roles in Macross OC are as follows; Marine Valkyrie Pilot (most screentime), Support Staff (Lesser screen time), MEchanics (Don't go here unless you like ark, he's a Mechanic), infantry or destroid pilot.

Marine Valk pilots who die between Pluto and Earth can be assured of a gar death worthy of at least the Silver Star. One member has graciously volunteered to be the first to die and his death will be epic. After Millia shows up, however, all bets are off.:D

...what about the ones who have to find them and save their rears from the battlefield? :p :uhoh:

... One word to say it all: HAWT! :love::love::love:

Her history is sad, especially about the lost of her family. Her life is a roller-coaster ride, it seems, what with her being on the wrong side of law, and then integrated into the Bureau (why do I have a feeling that Project ZECT is a pet project of Jail Scaglietti?:uhoh: Fortunately it isn't :heh:). Luckily, her newfound friendship with Melissa provides her with a new perspective :nod:.

The Rider reference is ... :eyespin:.

Well, I figured I'd been putting off a female OC for some time now so might as make my first one hawt :naughty:. And you can't have enough Rider references! :eyespin: :eyespin: :eyespin:

Goodie! Ryotaro finally finds himself a rival in the form of Evangeline. I bet he'll find her more than a match for him :heh::heh::heh:. Nice touch on the project's background, didn't find much wrong there. :D

We'll just have to wait and see how they interact :p

Tempest this is how you do it:

*Activates Hyper Zector*

MAXIMUM RIDER POWER

*One, Two, Three, flips the horn over*

"Hyper Kick"

*flips the horn over*

RIDER KICK

*Runs up to Kha and obliterates him with an all powerful Hyper Kick*

*facepalms*

A decent attack, but none compared to this one:

*pulls out the Perfect Zector which combines with the 4 Zectors and presses the 4 buttons*

Kabuto, Sasword, Drake, TheBee Power. All Zector Combine.

*aims*

MAXIMUM HYPER CYCLONE

*fires off the massive energy attack*

Thus ends my two cents. But before I return to that empty void called Lurk-Space, allow me to present my personal choice in this matter:

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ONWARDS! TO THE NEW CADIA!

YES!!! ONWARDS!!!!!

lol *puts down the coffee*

coffee doesn't work for me actually :3

all it does is make me more tired than I already am :3

I'll stick with tea :p

ghazghkull

2008-05-19, 15:42

:eek:

Eva! You double posted!

:eek:!!!

:p

Evangelion Xgouki

2008-05-19, 15:46

:eek:

Eva! You double posted!

:eek:!!!

:p

Well, gotta keep the OC index and backlog breaker separate :p. Not my fault people aren't posting fast enough to separate my posts :p

ghazghkull

2008-05-19, 18:40

And the thread has gone silent

*sighs*

Comartemis

2008-05-19, 18:42

Worry not ghaz, I'm putting the finishing touches on a new character as we speak. Haxxbusters, prepare for combat!

ghazghkull

2008-05-19, 18:43

Worry not ghaz, I'm putting the finishing touches on a new character as we speak. Haxxbusters, prepare for combat!

:twitch:

Combat?

:twitch:

Interesting...choice of words ><

:twitch:

Evangelion Xgouki

2008-05-19, 18:45

And the thread has gone silent

*sighs*

*prods*

Go write up a OC vault like th rest of us to list all those fics you've been writing :p. That'll give you something to do for a bit

stormturmoil

2008-05-19, 18:49

Rebuild of Turmoil

Rebuilt of Turmoil

Rebuilt of Turmoil

Name: David Brown
Nickname: ‘Eerie’ Brown
Affiliation: Space-Time Administration Bureau, Section 13
Age: 32
Gender: male
Racial Classification: Earth Human
Magic-user Type: Neo-Mid Type
Magic-user Rank: B+
Height: 6’3”
Weight: 182lbs
Hair Colour: red, streaked with metallic grey
Eye Colour: steel grey. David wears Glasses

David is Right handed

Basic Outfit: Usually appears in reproductions of Common Earth Clothing, usually black cargo pants, Emerald Green shirt, woollen pullover in colder weather. Almost always wears Navy Blue vest/bodywarmer for the sake of the extra pockets (actually a body Armour vest from Earth, though most Midchildans don’t recognise it as such. This also conveniently covers the Torso Harness of his Grey Frame device) Commonly seen in a grey scarf that seems to be a trademark item of sorts. Favours heavy boots for footwear.

Barrier Jacket: as might be expected of a mage whose former profession was mostly medical, the Bureau medical uniform forms a part of David’s Barrier jacket design, retaining the Black Cargo pants, Emerald Green Shirt and white sleeveless lab coat over a more subdued bodysuit similar to that affected by the Numbers in a darker grey and Navy blue scheme. Over his torso he continues to wear his Navy Blue Flak vest (actually a genuine piece of real body armour), with it’s many pockets loaded with various additional non-magical medical supplies. He also retains his grey scarf.

David possesses 3 specific Devices tailored to his own personal style and built for him by Bureau eccentric Device Meister Aurion Dauer, with further personal Modifications. These Devices play directly into the ‘Shooting Arts’ style of Magical Melee combat as practiced (and partially developed by) David Brown, and so are highly specialised compared to most Device Types. While Classified as Being Mid-type Devices (or Neo-Mid, to be precise) they are much more similar to Neo Belkan Types in practice; the discrepancy in designation comes from the fact that the Belkan and Neo-Belka styles had not been re-introduced to Bureau attention when the Devices were first created.

Control Device – Grey Frame
Special features Hybrid Magitech/technological Exoskeletal strength amplification; Magical energy regulation and control; Device Management

The central hub of David’s personal Device ‘network’, Grey Frame is the heart of his abilities and interfaces with his other Devices. Based around a suspected low level Lost Logia, the Grey Frame features an Intelligent Device-class AI system that coordinates and controls the other attached Devices and regulates David’s often-uncontrolled Magical output.

The System takes the form of exoskeleton rods and braces that act as trans-skeletal supports, transmitting additional force to the limbs and reinforcing the body against strain. This is not a powered armour system; the user does not receive any significant additional protection from the system, favouring movement ability and power amplification over armoured protection. Because of David’s Terran Upbringing and his inherent mistrust of Magic, especially his own unpredictable Savant Mage abilities, the system utilises conventional power amplifying Hydraulics, servomotors and Synthetic Muscle Fibres as well as Magi-technological means of muscle enhancement. This means the system can still function, albeit with a lower performance, in high AMF environments.

The major node of the system is in the form of a square icon held in a reinforced chest harness that is worn as opposed to summoned, and so must be physically put on or removed. It’s other extremities are however retractable and only deploy on command. Because of the reliance on conventional technology, the Devices cannot wholly discorporate as can true Pseudomatter projections, and so certain elements such as the spinal braces, waist harness and torso section remain in place, with the others pulled in along the back. This can lead to the appearance of wearing a backpack when not in use. It’s commonly noted that David often appears to have broken his back in two places; this is because of the spinal support joints, which cannot emulate a true spine and so use heavy, complex joints.

Armed Devices – Power Gloves
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Special features – Hybrid Magitech/technological power augmentation

Inspired by Quint Nakajima’s Revolver Knuckles, this pair of hugely powerful armoured gauntlets massively increase the hitting power of David’s hands. They utilise both magical and conventional technological means of strength augmentation, including Hydraulics, Servomotors and synthetic Muscle Fibre as well as reinforcement type spells and magi-technological power transmission to massively amplify the user’s physical strength, grip and dexterity. Flanged joints link the Units to jointed Armatures operated by the Central controlling Grey Frame Exoskeletal support system to offset the mass and strain incurred by their use. When not in use, they fold behind the back, as they cannot discorporate due to their use of conventional technology.

Because David is right handed, there are minor differences in the units: the left hand unit is heavier and more heavily armoured and reinforced, making it more suitable for blocking attacks, while the right unit can deliver a shocking electrostatic charge disruptive to nerve activity and sensitive electronics.

Boost Device – Ram Calibur
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Special features Pressure jets: amplified leaping and sprinting ability; powered grip rams; speed treads

The somewhat archaic predecessor to the Devices Mach Calibur and Blitz Calibur, Ram Calibur is close to the root of the ‘Shooting Arts’ style and was heavily influenced by Quint Nakajima’s input, though it differs in that it also revolves around the different style favoured by it’s user. Unlike Mach Calibur and Blitz Calibur, Ram Calibur boosts both Mobility and Immobility. When in motion, movement is accomplished by large cyclic treads built into the feet, permitting lower speed than the Wheeled Devices, but with better traction and stability. This also factors into it’s other function, Immobility, whereby it’s huge blocky footpads and treads provide massive grip and allow the user to retain their footing over almost any surface, making them very nearly an immovable object. As well as their stability and mobility enhancements, the massively armoured boots also offer protection for the legs, and the opportunity to use their mass and bulk for powerful kick attacks should not be underestimated.

as with the Power Gloves, the Ram Calibur units are linked to the central Grey Frame exoskeletal System to offset their mass, bulk and strain and provide overall control. As with the Power Gloves, the use of conventional technology means the units cannot discorporate and so merely fold away into a backpack style storage form when not in use.

Personality:
Dour, distant and brooding are the words most people immediately want to use when they first set eyes on the subject, but they’re almost always forced to re-evaluate once he actually speaks. While he may look distracted and sour (with reason, I hasten to add), in truth, that’s merely an illusion.

On the other hand, he’s actually doing and seeing things he’d never have believed possible within his lifetime. While occasionally memories of his past can cloud his thoughts, this usually passes quickly, especially when he’s confronted with some of the amazing and unearthly sights he’s been able to see since leaving Earth and stepping out into the larger dimensional world. In his own words: “ This…is everything I always used to dream of when I read Sci-fi back as a kid…strange new worlds…new life and new civilisations…ok, it’s not exactly ‘where no one has gone before’, but still…golden cities far…”

As a result, his single biggest Gripe with the Space Time Administration Bureau’s higher ups is that they tried to keep him from seeing those sights at all, and it’s still something of a sore point with him.

Current Disposition
David Brown has become something of an enigma among the Bureau, a little bit of an open mystery. While not properly speaking an Ace, his unusual skill set and versatility have earned him a reputation not for Flash, but for getting the Job done reliably.

Which makes his secondment to Section 13 even more inexplicable. Unlike most of the Frontline posts that would seem more suited to his temperament and experience, David Brown is current sole member of the peculiar Section 13, devoted to unusual, inexplicable or otherwise unresolved cases that have piled up among the Bureau’s Backlog over the years. It’s rumoured that many of the cases are actually old myths, ghost stories or even just events so embarrassing no one in the bureau wants to deal with them. This has lead to him picking up the Nickname ‘Eerie’ Brown.
Of course, this is only amongst some of the more high-ranking Bureau members, since section 13’s existence is classified and publicly it doesn’t exist. Nevertheless, among those that know of it, it is still an open secret that Brown was seconded to it out of a desire to put him out of the public limelight and bury the Sentoukijin case with which he was tangentially connected.

History:

Found on the 97th non-administrated world, David Brown’s was an unusual case, not merely since magical ability is unusual on that world, but because even among those who do possess the ability, almost always a trigger event is usually required to allow them to use that ability (with the exception of the odd subconscious manifestation during adolescence)

Such was not the case of the young man whom Gil Graham reported back on, performing medical duties at a show Graham had elected to attend in his Native England.

David Brown not only possessed the ability, he was also using it readily on a day-to-day basis with impressive results. It seemed almost certain he would make a valuable addition to The Bureau (assuming he consented to the terms). However, this was before a certain snag was encountered by the team sent to interview him.

While David Brown was certainly using very high level healing magic in the course of his work, he was also completely unaware of this. Rather, he was merely following his first aid training. The impressively high recovery rate from even serious injuries might have argued otherwise only if an alternative explanation had existed on Earth at the time. The Bureau interviewers, however, knew differently.

Hence, a quandary was encountered. David Brown certainly had the potential to be a great mage…but while he was already utilising magic, such use was totally subconscious. At the same time, however, while the use of his healing magic was not necessarily in itself a danger, the fact that he could use such magic subconsciously strongly implied that he could, under other circumstances, potentially use other magic subconsciously, which could pose a threat to himself and others, and risked not only fallout over the revelation of the existence of magic, but possibly even dimensional disturbances.

It was decided to approach David, to attempt to persuade him to enter into a Bureau-approved training program, or in the worst-case scenario, to abduct him and find a way to impose a limiter to restrict his magic to prevent any untoward happenings.

To the surprise of the interviewing officer, the first thing David did was asking him for a job.

Taken somewhat aback by this overly enthusiastic response to what in all fairness could have been a fairly nasty matter, the interviewing officer deferred the matter until Brown could be transferred back to Bureau headquarters. Once there, however, from the way the young man’s eyes lit up in wonder, no one had any real doubts about how the interview was likely to turn out.

While David did agree to become a Bureau mage, he also requested a number of concessions, which after due consideration were granted. These included the right to visit Earth when not on duty, which was granted under the proviso he first gain full control over his abilities (given the origins of several other notable Bureau members, this was considered a very low risk concession), as well as the ability to divert portions of his pay to an account on Earth to support his family still there, again granted.

After a short period of orientation, David was put into the selection process, and his abilities tested. Under tutelage from various sources, the nature of his abilities was discerned, and the likely path of specialisation he was to undertake decided on.

Since he had been using his power non-stop without knowing it for several years prior to training, his progress was understandably rapid. Unusually, he was assigned a unit posting after only a few weeks of initial training.

David’s particular specialisation is as a support mage, specialising in enhancement and healing, as well as defensive spells. Coupled with more commonplace aid techniques, David is able to treat most injuries and trauma with great success. Similarly, his ability to stimulate the body process of a subject can also be used in an enhancement role, essentially ‘Overclocking’ a subject’s biological systems to allow them to perform beyond their normal physical limits.

The downside to his proficiency in this field is that because he as been using these abilities subconsciously for so long in his former work, they have become limited to a very close range of operation, usually requiring a physical touch to initiate (or for him to use them on himself). His use of ranged abilities is practically non-existent. This puts him somewhat at odds with the Mid-Style school of ranged magic and more closely resembles the Belkan type magical proficiency; however, at the time David was recruited, the Belkan-type school of magic was little more than an old myth and the Bureau had yet to implement the Neo-Belka style into it’s regimen, leaving David with the thorny prospect of having to develop his own unique style of magical use from scratch.

Despite this, David is, by choice, a field Medic, and thus is expected to be able to take care of himself if need be. Against ranged attackers, his primary means of defence becomes his array of defensive spells, which he can form very rapidly anywhere within arm’s length. His primary means of offensive ability falls to close range melee combat, however. While David is by no means an exceptional fighter, and his magical power level is not great, he does benefit from a close association with a great teacher of a unique magical martial art, the so-called ‘Shooting Arts’ school of High mobility magical melee combat he learned (and helped develop) alongside Quint Nakajima, whom he admired greatly. He also spent some time instructing the two Type-0 combat Cyborg children Subaru and Ginga Nakajima in the same self-developed Shooting Arts, though much to his embarrassment they rapidly surpassed him.

Originally, David did not need to have access to a Device, but as he gained control over his powers, the additional benefits the use of a Device offered become impossible to ignore. David has since modified his Devices to suit his needs more closely. Since David lacks ranged abilities, he is heavily dependent on melee combat in a battle. However, while he is not terribly strong or fast initially, he is able to use his extensive enhancement abilities to stack the odds in his favour by improving his abilities on the fly.

Name: Cure /Cura /Curaga /Curaja
Type: Healing
Description: healing acceleration. Uses Magical energy to increase the action of natural healing. Requires that any injury or wound be suitable for natural healing to take place before the spell can work: e.g., the wound must not be obstructed (so removal of shrapnel, weapons or the like must be performed, with the associated risks). If broken bones are involved, unless the bones are properly set, the spell’s accelerated healing may cause them to become fused improperly.
One unpleasant side effect is that when these spells are used, the patient experiences all the discomfort and pain usually accompanying the natural healing process, but compressed into a very small space of time. Significantly, the patient’s natural healing processes must be in sufficiently good condition to handle the healing for this to work. Mortally wounded patients will not respond to these spells. Each successive spell in the series requires more magical energy, but provides a greater healing boost and/or allows the effect to be divided amongst more patients by successive touches.

Name: White Wind
Type: Healing
Description: Uses magical energy to slightly accelerate the natural healing of all nearby beings. One of the few spells David possesses that does not require direct physical contact.

Name: Panacea
Type: Healing
Description: uses magical energy to latch onto and destroy specific molecules within a targets body. This effectively neutralises most forms of poisons. Note this does not recover any damage already inflicted by a poison.

Name: Revive
Type: Healing
Description: uses magical energy to jumpstart neural activity, waking the target from unconsciousness. Can be dangerous to use on badly injured subjects.

Name: Regen
Type: Healing/enhancement
Description: Uses magical energy to provoke a substantial increase in the patient’s regenerative system, causing them to regenerate tissues much faster than usual. For as long as the effect remains, the target’s rate of natural healing is accelerated significantly, allowing them to rapidly recover from injuries or exertion. Prolonged, repeated use can lead to malnourishment and/or physical exhaustion as body systems are starved of nutrition instead being used for regeneration. Can be used in conjunction with Cure series spells.

Name: Haste
Type: Enhancement
Description: uses magical energy to ‘overclock’ the action of the target’s nervous and muscular systems, allowing them to act and move much faster than would normally be the case, for as long as the effect lasts. Prolonged, repeated use can lead to malnourishment and/or physical exhaustion as the body systems consume metabolic energy far more rapidly than normal. Can cause Strain injuries

Name: Might
Type: Enhancement
Description: Magical energy is used to increase the attractive forces between Muscle fibres, resulting in an increase in the amount of force produced by a subject’s existing muscle mass. This allows the subject increased strength, but reduces their ability to perform delicate actions, as the muscles cannot respond to fine control as well. Prolonged, repeated use can lead to malnourishment and/or physical exhaustion as the body systems consume metabolic energy far more rapidly than normal. Can cause strain injuries.

Name: Alert
Type: enhancement
Description: uses magical energy to enhance the operation of the target’s natural senses to their maximum possible potential, allowing them to make the most possible use of all their senses.

Name: Endurance
Type: enhancement
Description: uses magical energy to artificially substitute for metabolic energy, allowing the target to sustain physical exertion for longer before suffering the effects of fatigue.

Name: Armour Aura
Type: Enhancement/Defensive
Description: reinforces the user’s skin with a form-fitting layer of magical energy that serves to ablate attacks. As this is a skin surface effect, it serves as a last line of defence within that provided by fields, shields, barriers and barrier Jacket defences.

Name: Shield Saw
Type: Defensive/melee
Description: Uses a modified shield effect as both defensive shield and, when wielded edge on, as a rotating cutting edge similar in principle to a circular saw. This allows the use of a primarily defensive spell in an offensive setting. The ‘Saw’ can also be launched like a discus, but dissipates rapidly upon leaving contact with the user.

Name: Jackhammer strike
Type: melee/movement
Description: Accelerates the speed of David’s thrusts with his Device to extreme frequency, essentially allowing him to strike several times a second. Similar in concept to applying the likes of Sonic move repeatedly to just the blade. Rapidly chips away at barriers and shields.

Name: Grey Strobe
Type: movement
Description: accelerates the user extremely rapidly over a short distance. Similar to the likes of sonic move, flash step etc.

Name: Sky Step
Type: movement
Description: by using projected shields beneath his feet, David is able to run essentially anywhere he wishes, into the air or across impassable surfaces. He can also string together leaps using this method. As this is a small-scale contact effect, David can perform this subconsciously almost effortlessly.

Name: Wing Road
Type: movement
Description: a staple of the Shooting Arts style, this projects a continually advancing road of barrier energy upon which an individual can be supported and move along with complete freedom to control the path of the ‘road’.

Name: Assault Grip
Type: movement
Description: permits use of grip studs in treads to increase grip and allow precarious manoeuvres to be performed acting against other forces that seek to destabilise the user.

Name: Shield Stretcher
Type: Utility
Description: uses a plane shield as a means to carry heavy or bulky objects, most commonly incapacitated patients.

Name: Barrier Bandage
Type: utility
Description: exploits barrier properties to apply a self sealing film of magical energy to seal and protect a wound, preventing excessive blood loss and ingress of infectious agents. As this is a projected effect, it can even be manifested Inside a patient’s body to temporarily stop internal bleeding.

[b] Full Drive mode: [b]

Name: Limit Breaker: Catalyst
Type: Enhancement
Description:
The ultimate extension of all David’s enhancement spells is this singular application of all his most powerful enhancement effects upon himself at an unrestricted level not subject to the limiters normally applied by his Devices. Whereas his enhancements are normally regulated both to prevent overexertion and overcast effects and to allow a sufficient reserve Mana flow for other spells, in this Full Drive form, the limiters are abandoned and his entire Mana flow is directed into enhancement. In this state, David is powered beyond the normal limits of human endurance. His movement is enhanced beyond even the levels permitted by Haste, making his ordinary movements as fast as sonic move, Flash Step and similar, while his strength is amplified to the point where he can lift and throw multiple tons with ease. His senses become sharp enough to detect even stealthy adversaries, while his durability and stamina are similarly pushed above the norm for even enhanced mages or knights.

However, because this enhancement is the result of directing all of his Mana flow towards enhancement, he cannot cast any new spells once it is in operation (he can, however, maintain an already cast persistent spell.) as a result, once he has invoked Catalyst, his enhanced abilities and any persistent effects are the totality of his resources.

Furthermore, the level of enhancement available in catalyst is dangerous to use in terms of strain on the user’s unnaturally empowered body, and in terms of keeping control of the now massively overpowered abilities at David’s command; it is all too easy to, for example, misjudge the amount of force in a blow, accidentally accelerate past and overshoot a target while running, crush items due to uncontrolled strength and so on.

Because of the massive physical strain generated by the use of Catalyst, as well as the massive potential for unintended damage, it’s use is heavily discouraged.

another rejig. Based on certain Background tweaks, David gains new devices and systems to support his now Shooting Arts Based pure melee style.

This allows him to keep up with a Cyborg, and so allows him to be linked in with Subaru and Ginga as an older 'oji-san' style teacher figure. As a result, he has experience and ability that puts him in the scope for dealing with some of the remainder Numbers once they're freed from the tubes.

It also ties in with ATC's Olympian armour equipped by Crash and Battery; this is an unarmoured system that merely uses the skeleton of the same kind of assembly.

One consequence is that since this is now an 'older' type set of Devices, is that they don't disappear into storage form (as Subaru's Revolver Knuckle did not before Shari got her hands on it). This goes further; as it uses force amplifying technology of both magictech and conventional nature, they cannot discorporate, and so are worn as a backpack when not in use (This also ties in with his Terran background which makes him distrustful of magic, especially his own unpredictable Savant magic, and so he has insisted on a system that still operates independent of what his magic may be doing. This inadvertantly allows it to operate in AMF conditions)

Savant remains to explain why he's limited to pure melee, and also to explain why he wasn't part of the group with Quint, Zest, Megane et al during the StrikerS flashback when he allegedly knew Quint Nakajima and even learned Shooting Arts from her and developed some of it himself- because of his Savant Magic, which is unpredictable, the STAB HQ didn't allow him to accompany them, viewing him as a liability...

naturally, this is something else that will gnaw at him, and may provoke confrontation with some canon cast if it's revealed....

Bonus points for those who can spot the origins of the Device pics.

despite this, he's still mainly a support type character...

He may not be Awesome, but he's got your Back...

Or should that be (and for the original owner of this phrase too, for those that recognize it...)

That: He IS awesome BECAUSE he's got your back?

Mahou Shounen Medical David, Hajimarimas

ghazghkull

2008-05-19, 18:51

*prods*

Go write up a OC vault like th rest of us to list all those fics you've been writing :p. That'll give you something to do for a bit

I have a separate vault for my fics :3

It's in my signature if you actually pay attention :3

I have a link that leads to my characters, and then another vault that leads to my fics, which includes my fics for OC :3

AdmiralTigerclaw

2008-05-19, 19:23

Stuff up:

Time Space Administration Beaurau Experimental Systems Test Force

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"William Roland"
CALLSIGN: Steamroller
RANK: Major General (Two Star)
POSITION: TSAB Base Commander, Abenobashi Airforce Base, head of BEST FORCE.
AGE: 44
MAGE CLASS: B

Will STEAMROLLER Rolland hails from Non-Administrated World 97, Earth.
Before his introduction to the TSA, he was already a military man in his early twenties. Operating in the United States Army First Cavalry Division stationed out of Fort Hood Texas.
As a tank Commander of Second Brigade (Blackjack Brigade), First Batallion, Fifth Cavalry Regiment, the BLACK KNIGHTS, he was deployed to Iraq in October 1990 as part of Operation Desert Shield/Desert Storm

On 20 February 1991, the brigade launched the first ground strike into Iraq with "Operation Knight Strike". Shortly after this, Roland's first encounter with the TSAB was recorded.

Unrelated to Roland up until this point, an unidentified Iraqi commander of the Republican Guard had somehow managed to obtain a hazzardous Lost Logia Artifact, and had been detected by TSA intelligence some time prior as a potential threat. During 'Knight Strike', the Tank Unit Roland was part of encountered this commander and was engaged. Realizing the Republican Guard commander was indeed using the Lost Logia as a weapon, the TSAB cruiser on station decided to intervene.

TSA Enforcer units deployed a barrier under containment orders just as the engagement began, preventing the panicked communications from getting out when the unit was 'engaged by an unidentified weapon.' Several tanks took damage or were destroyed in the crossfire before Enforcers could arrive to assist. However, even the enforcers took some casualties during the intervention, due to the powerful nature of the artifact.

Roland was noted, not only for providing immediate medical attention to the injured Enforcers, but despite having a damaged tank, sunk a shot directly into the position of the Iraqi commander, neutralizing him.
Details noted that Roland had teamed up with one of the Enforcers to act as eyes for him while he took this shot.

Enforcers recovered the artifact from the dead commander, and held a field debrief instructing all those present never to speak about what they encountered since Earth was not prepared for this. All pressent agreed, citing that nobody would actually believe them, and fabricated that the whole thing was a messy friendly fire incident. The Enforcers departed and the barrier dropped.

Two years later, after Roland's discharge from the US Army, he was contacted again by TSAB Enforcers and requested to join for his commendable performance. Sensing a whole new 'universe' of oppertunity, he accepted.

Roland was a shock to the TSA's Beauraucratic System. He both understood how Beauracracy worked, and how to function in a unit, or in charge of a unit in combat far more than other Mages his rank.
Determined to either see him fail and be swept under the matt, or see him set a new example for the TSA Ground Forces, Regius threw demanding assignments at Roland...

Despite having nothing even ressembling magic, his performance was deemed quite productive. Able to manage, instruct, lead, and follow, he flew up the ranks, only occaisionally roadblocked by Regius' steadfast Iron will, wanting Roland to perform above and beyond what was expected of other ground forces.
When Roland finally made the rank of General, Regius gave him a new assignment.

As head of the offshore TSA Test and Disposal Facility at McGreggor Archipelligo, and the old Mid-Childan airbase there, he was to attempt to clean up its act.
William Rolland managed to aquire a second star after successfully cleaning up the facility's act in two years, earning the Respect of Regius for time and again, successfully rising to the challenges the old General threw at him.

Maj. General William Roland is a laid back, but serious man. Having long been associated in a system of military, believes that certain aspects of understanding and preparing for warfare should never be loosened, no matter the mood of the population.

He has often called many of the TSAB's higher ranking officers, including Regius himself, Armchair Commanders, after the fact the most, if not all of them have never seen, let alone participated in REAL full scale war. He shares a belief with few that the TSAB is paranoid in its doctrine, and that if someone doesn't at least keep their finger on that pulse, that they would be utterly blinded and inevitably unprepared for a time when the TSAB would have to aknowledge and prepare to defend itself at full scale.

He concerns himself with safety and security measures with redundancies and a doctrine of spreading out vulnerabilities while overlapping strengths. He takes exsquisite pleasure in occaisionally drilling lower ranking TSA personelle in the methods and doctrines of Earth styled non-magical combat... drilling in tactics that translate across the board, intent on making even the lowest ranked mages under his command capable of lasting more than five seconds in a protacted fight against unsavory odds.

Abilities:

SHOOT-MOVE-COMMUNICATE-KILL: (S.M.C.K. or 'Smack')
Roland has and can operate as command for an entire unit. Capable of giving extremely clear orders on where to go, how fast to go, what to do, and how to do it, in a tone that motivates those recieving the orders to do it right, as fast as they can.

SMOKED MEAT:
When feeling insulted, and having the authority over the person who did the insulting, Roland will not hesitate to order the person into an excersize position, and procede to instruct a reprisal excersize routine on that individual until it is obvious they are physically in pain. Often citing lines such as 'Where the brain fails, the body must take up the slack' and 'Mind or Body, whichever one it is, one of them WILL be strong.' He calls this punishment a 'smoking'(Which may or may not refer to the cloud of steam resulting from evaporating sweat from a victim caught in cool or cold weather.)

OLD DOG:
Roland is a SOLDIER, and a Veteran one at that with actual experience. He has learned to effectively move and fight without magic, and is capable of a decent level of direct hand to hand combat when cornered.

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"Martin Victor Hugo"
CALLSIGN: VIPER
RANK: Colonel
POSITION: TSAB Test Force X.O. Abenobashi Airforce Base.
AGE: 60
MAGE CLASS: AAA

Martin, as he's known around base as, comes from a time when the TSAB was a grittier place, from less friendly times when dimensional space was more a gutsy job than the smoothed out flow it has become today.

Martin Victor Hugo started his career out at age ten as an assistant test pilot for the Test Force, helping the test pilots of the term in their duties before he eventually climbed up the ladder of actual test pilot, and eventually to the position of lead Test Force Pilot. For a time, he enjoyed all the perks of the system as a lead, trying out experimental concepts like the Mage Portable Arc-En-Ciel project. (Project Terminated due to extremely unpredictable and dangerous results.)

His potential would eventually be realized by the TSAB, who believed they were doing him a favor when they reassigned him from what they believed to be the dead-end job of the Test Force, to the Enforcer Unit. A move that would certainly advance his career. Spending Twenty years of his life as an Enforcer, he became a hardenned combatant, and his callsign 'Viper' became a well respected name amongst the Air Force and Naval Mages, known for his lightning fast and deadly strikes in both aireal mage combat, and aircraft performance.
Martin eventually almost had to be forced to become an Air Instructor and quickly became one of the Top Agressors of his day. The Callsign Viper quickly became synonimous with the term 'You' are already dead." A phrase that most trainees came to call the call of the Grim Reaper.
Instructors who are still with the training force remember the callsign, and have said that if Martin ever got a chance to try his metal against the new Supreme Agressor Takamachi Nanoha, it would be a battle of supremely EPIC proportions.

When it came up near time for Martin V. Hugo to retire, instead of a full retirement, he decided he'd settle back to a desk job, where he could still influence the 'kids' of the modern age, going back to that nostalgic point from so many years ago, the Abenobashi Air Base in the ocean, the Test Facility. Though older than the current base commander, he prefered to stay off the command chain and work as an XO, maintaining no higher than the rank of Colonel. Few realise the significance of his face without his use of the imfamous callsign he has, but from time to time, the pilots at the facility have come to know that when the Imfamous VIPER comes up to play, the jokes are over and the real test begins.

*Martin's old dogfight theme...*
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"Don Martin"
CALLSIGN: Double Spanner (AKA Double S Don)
RANK: CHIEF WARRANT OFFICER 5 (CW5)
POSITION: TSA Test FORCE, head mechanic.
AGE: 42
MAGE CLASS: C

As people go, Don is an excelent example of the all too underrated philosophy of Hard Work, Guts, and Determination. Unlike many more gifted mages, Don has, since his childhood days, worked for every ounce of dignity, skill, knowledge, and respect he's earned in forty years. More than anyone on the Best Force, he understands the underlying value of back breaking labor, the sting of even the smallest loss, and the importance of being conservative and efficient.
Starting from his early days, he persued the route of the engineer and mechanic, opting to work on the physical and practical, rather than the meta-physical abilities of Magic in general. Working hard, and never stopping even in the face of failure, he earned his engineering degrees, all six of them, from his own blood, sweat, and tears.
He earned his position with the best force the same way, working hard, never quitting, putting in overtime. With knowledge, skill, experience, and age, he earned the seldom noticed position of Head of Maintanance. A master engineer and scrupulous mechanic.

It is this hard working background that made Don the way he is today. Don abhors waste, inefficiency, and failure. He often can be seen as the engeering version of a packrat. If it can be used, you can be sure he's the one who finds a way to use it. His pet peeves stretch from matierals, to money, to even effort. Don hates wasted effort and wasted potential probably more than anyone would realize.
This is probably why he is as angry as he is whenever something is broken by carelessness, or ignorance. Each piece of damaged equipment reprisents hours of effort, sometimes on his own part, wasted away, and he will not hesitate to let ANYONE know that.

ANYONE. It has been rumored that during a personal inspection visit by Gen. Regius himself, Don had been crossed by the General's overall disdain for some of the equipment he'd been working on, and dropped what he was doing, to explain in explicit detail over a period of two hours, exactly what practical uses the equipment would have, from direct use, all the way to the repurcussions using the recycled equipment would have on improving the budget situation of the TSAB as a whole, while screaming it all at the top of his lungs, until he was blue in the face as he constantly swung a pair of vehicle spanners dangerously close to the senior general's face. This is where the legacy that is Double Spanners Don (Or Double S Don as he's also reffered to.) was born. Don simply is not afraid. As a proud mechanical engineer, he thinks of himself simply as a problem solver. The rest of the staff treat him with great respect, and a certain level of satire, going so far as to rank his bad moods on a scale from C, to SS. Nobody argues with his mechanical decisions, and everyone appreciates his effort to keep everything running as smoothly as he does.

To date, he's been at Odds with Crash, almost since the arrival of the Pilot to the test facility. Seeing Crash as the ultimate threat to efficiency and waste management, he almost always directs his rage towards the test pilot, to which Crash has become accustomed to hearing and ignoring. It infuriates Don even more that technically, ninty-nine point nine percent of the problems aren't actually Crash's fault, but more a series of highly improbable events that happen to occure in his pressence. Be they the moments equipment decides to fail, to the domino effects that destroy communications towers. All of which he sees as caused by Crash and his Murphy Effect, but niether that fault of Crash being deliberate, or negligent.

He however, absolutely Adores Fox, seeing the mechanically inclined young lady as a surrogate daughter, and one who shares a common interest. Often instructing her to plug her ears when he's preparing to go on a tirade, and requesting her help on mechanical work during downtime.
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NAME: Ford T. Daonau
CALLSIGN: Crash
RANK: Major
POSITION: Test Force Test Squadron Leader, Unit 01.
AGE: 24
MAGE CLASS: B

PROFILE:

Time Space Administration Beaurau Experimental Systems Test Force (T.S.A. B.E.S.T. F.) Test Pilot, leading unit (Unit 01) Callsign known only as 'Crash'.
His real name is kept to authorized eyes only due to the particular nature of his inherent physical ability and its potential to create enemies.
As a Cadet, he recieved this callsign as the first ever cadet to 'successfully' crash and wreck a full sized TSA Dimensional Cruiser, while it was still powered down and in drydock, resulting in massive damage to the docking facility, and terminal catastrophic damage to the cruiser.

( - Official reports state that no existing records from the Incident can prove he was the actual cause of the accident, providing it was more a manner of extremely strange coincidences that lined up in a seemingly impossible fashon to cause the incident rather than any direct negligence or intent on his part. Lindy Haralowne opted to protect him from full punishment... No charges could be pressed. He was given six months remedial training. Instructors weren't too happy with having him longer...)

Crash had become known throughout his cadet days, as a man with a motto. He could break ANYTHING. Records, rules, equipment, vehicles. 'He's a walking murphy's law' some had said. Some younger cadets even suggested he was cursed or immortal, as he seemed to get into more crazy and violent accidents than it should have been physically possible to do, and even more physically impossible that he pretty much walked away from nearly all of them.

He was assigned to TSA B.E.S.T. F., the Test Force which helped develope experimental magical technologies and equipment, putting his 'talent' to good use by finding the flaws in new equipment, vehicles, and technology. And find those flaws he did. Crash's test piloting has seen him litterally walk away from 126 'fatal' accidents with nothing more than a shrug, while the entire command staff gawked each and every time, and Test Force CommandeR Roland commented about having a heart attack, each and every time... Including 34 'fatal' accidents that occured while the TSA was modernizing the Belkan cartraige system for current, stable use.

His piloting is... unique. Crash claims he isn't much of a fighter, but his talent for finding weird ways to break things has developed into a skill in which he can make vehicles and equipment do things that seem to defy logic itself. His extensive testing of magical weapons has gained him moderate skill in their use all across the board, especially with most of the ranged magical arms available.

As of late, Crash has been working on the COMBAT BATTERY project to produce a device that can provide all around heavy combat effectiveness equal to an A rank mage, to even mages of negligable power levels. After a particularly violent accident during the project, which involved strangely enough, a PVC pipe, duct tape, a paperclip, and chewing gum as the triggers, Crash was quoted as calling the project... 'An absolute BLAST!'.
Whether or not that was because he'd just been blown 200 meters by a magical explosion, or because he thought it was fun, has never been determined.

In the late phase field testing of the BATTERY device system, he was redirected to an active intercept role during a major flight test of the new system, where he was promptly cut off from Test Force Command and TSAGCOM before being engaged by six of the Imfamous 'Numbers' Combat Cyborgs. It was believed they were after some of the experimental tech being used in the Battery, and was using their artifact raid on the auction to the east as cover. Crash managed to prove the effectiveness of the Battery system and its flexibility by not only actively engaging them, but surviving against these well trained killers for the eight and a half minutes it took to scramble reinforcements to assist him.

As far as people go, he's moderately intelligent, a very fast reflexive thinker, and actually quite a decent strategy planner. Mostly this is inherent of his experience, having to frequently dodge extremely lethal situations brought up by his 'inherent abilities'. Completely used to his personal brand of chaos, he takes care not to take excessive actions which may cause a localized dissaster. This goes especially double around any dangerous equipment. He's a nice guy, but has a bit of a smart mouth at times... Mostly when under stress. Despite the increased risk his very pressence brings, most people find no problem being around him, the risk made up for by his amiable personality, and refreshing go-gettum attitude.

Currently, he attempting to learn some basic hand to hand combat skills from Fox, the second person in his unit, and is actually adapting quite rapidly, even if he's sloppy with his movements.

Crash's Battery Device, and the Olympian Powered Armor Exoskeleton are the latest incarnation of the battery device test project, something for which crash has endured live combat to work on, and the AI has managed to adapt to his strange luck. The ever changing configuration of the system makes it difficult to give stats for it, but the armor, with a flight capable mage, is in itself, flight capable. The latest enhancements contain the MADAM system, as well as Crash's admittedly favorite armament, the MFR Wide Mission Armament.

ABILITIES:

Murphy's Law AVALANCHE: Around crash, Murphy's Law does not just apply, it is literally planned for. Usually, this takes the form of something small, usually several of them at random. Luckly, these tend only occure if there truely is something that would go wrong at any other given time, and usually only with near to direct contact with crash. (As an example, lightbulbs won't randomly burn out, unless he taps the bulb, or touches a power circuit connected to it, and only if the bulb was due to burn out in the first place.)

Crash Dominos: Unlike Above, this is the cause of the most catastrophic of incidents. Usually only if Crash has near direct action in the situation. The events that go wrong during this situation tend to do so in a way that triggers the next event in the chain, leading through a domino or butterfly effect that results in a much larger net result. Usually destructive.

A brief study in both these effects showed that when pressent, Crash causes an eighty percent increase in the probability of mechanical failure in old or stressed materials. Deep study suggests that Crash has some kind of inherent quantum probability fluxuation. Unfortunately, no solid evidence can be found, and the theory remains unquantified.

Final Destination: It has been postulated that if Crash could ever learn to control his unusual talent, he could theoretically stage domino effects or chain reactions that have pre-calculated effects. Such effects could range from rigging of random draw events, to controlled demolition, to 'lethal accidents' with a specific target in mind. No one has figured out any possible way he could do this without first quantifying the effects, but for this reason, his name has been designated a secret to protect himself and his family from potential threats or exploit attempts.

Crash Dominos, how they would appear in action:
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"Izumi Miyazaki"
CALLSIGN: FOX
RANK: Captain
POSITION: Best Force ATS, Unit 02.
AGE: 14
MAGE CLASS: C (3.7 points average from score sheet.)

Almost from the moment she could walk, Fox has been a most interesting young girl. She has a profound understanding of basic mechanical principles that borders on genius. Barely beyond toy blocks, she has been known to completely dissassemble and reassemble simple devices on her own. By Age Five, her profound understanding allowed her to learn and execute a basic martial arts move just by watching it. Though flawed, it was executed well enough that it was suggested she be enrolled in early self defense courses.
By age nine, she had been enrolled in several courses, and while not a master in any of them, was profficient enough to be quite formidable in hand to hand combat. By now, it was easily noted that she was Impatient, and despite near genius level mechanical ingenuity and application of mechanical force, she couldn't keep up with the theory side, which included bookwork, math, and other non physical materials.
At age twelve, she opted to join the TSAB, and was assigned after her training to the TSA BEST FORCE's Active Test Squadron under Crash. This proved to be quite a good choice. She immediately latched on to the walking demolition derby that is Crash like a big brother.

Izumi currently has extreme proficciency in Jeet Kun Do, Akido, and Jujitsu... Her mechanical skills are well advanced enough that she can predict performances of equipment on sight almost as well as test equipment, making her a good aid to the mechanics, and an astounding vehicle pilot. Though young, she is already an aircraft pilot, and considerably skilled, able to tangle with the likes of the BEST Force's localized vehicle squadrons, Mouse and Yellow. Her proficiency quickly earned her the callsign FOX, after the crafty way in which she used her understanding and translated it directly to combat areodynamics.
Magical Review found that asside from Fox's borderline paranormal understanding of the mechanical, she barely even registers any magical abilities at all.
Noted on the side, it seems that Izumi has a startling ressemblence to a fictional character named Asuka Langley Sorhyu, in both looks, and spunky personality. She has often heralded the nickname 'Second Child', which strikingly fits her position of Unit 02 of the ATS. She also sometimes takes on a momentary attitude of supreme superiority that mirrors her fictional counterpart that Crash has nicknamed the 'Langley Effect'
Izumi has been selectively ranked outside of standard procedure to fill the second-in-command slot under Crash for the roster in the ATS unit by Maj. Gen. Roland. She holds the Officer rank of Captain.

ABILITIES:

Mechanical. If it has moving parts, she can figure it out, in minutes. Often times she can after only doing it once, dissassemble and reassemble mechanical devices faster than those who've worked on them for years.

Martial. While not master rank, she is a black-belt in three hand to hand arts and in the process of learning fencing. She can, and has completely floored Crash for particular insults in single deft moves.

Piloting. She's very good, able to make outdated vehicles perform right up to their envolopes and beyond in ways most pilots are afraid to even attempt. Her short stature also allows her to operate on lower G force diffusion settings, which gives her a better feel for the vehicle's movement through three dimensional space.

The Langley Effect (As dubbed by Crash.)
In moments of superiority, Fox assumes a posture and attitude that makes even the toughest and most stubborn feel humiliated and dehumanized to the point of felling like the moss on the underside of a rock. Of course, with such a position comes an equally vicious possibility of an equally humiliating reversal. She tends to use it only when she feels to have the upper hand in verbal clashes.

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NAME: Cooper E. Prynoski
CALLSIGN: XTRA LRG (Extra Large)
RANK: NONE
POSITION: Civilian Contractor, Cybernetics and AI engineering, TSAB Test Force R&D
AGE: 25
MAGE CLASS: F

Cooper grew up as a classic Video-game TV junkie, a major fan of giant robot shows, video games, and pro wrestling. As a child, one could say he had a rather unhealthy obsession, but he didn't do too bad for himself. Constructive with his work, he was designing and building constantly more complicated cybernetic components in his garage as he got older, learning to program, and constantly increasing his body weight as he honed his talents for personal enjoyment.
He became obsessed with Arteficial Intelligence around the time Nanoha became part of the TSAB officially, and nearly locked himself in the closet just so he could make his own arteficial friend.

As a self taught Cybernetics Engineer, nobody would take him seriously, that is, until he created Key. A fully self sentient device AI. The TSAB tried to recruit him at this point, but his refusal to cooperate with the system in general made it difficult at best. Eventually, administration staff decided to hire him as an independant civilian contractor, so long as they provided the food and lodging for him, he didn't care about the pay, just what he got to play with. Cooper didn't mind when they sent him to McGreggor, in the middle of the ocean. To him, home was where the junk pile was, and McGreggor had a nice junk pile to mess with.
With an S Level security clearance, Cooper has free run of the test facility under the watchful eye of General Roland, and is considered one of the most brilliant, if eccentric and childish assets to the R&D division of the test force. However, as a Civilian Contractor, he has no authority whatsoever, but at the same time, gets to adhere to his own schedule.... within reason.

AdmiralTigerclaw

2008-05-19, 19:24

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Seventh Armada, Third Fleet: TSAB Naval Command, Special Weapons and Tactics unit:
SHOCK ENFORCERS

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Admiral H. Mishima

CALLSIGN: Thunderfist
RANK: Admiral
POSITION: Naval Commander, 3rd Fleet: CO of the Shock Enforcer Unit (Unit Creator)
AGE: 60
MAGE CLASS: S

Naval Commander Mishima for the TSAB Sailing Force, fifty year veteran, and high level close combat mage. A no nonsense, straight to the point officer with an attitude as hard as his skin.
This is one of the reasons Regius hated the Navy.
Admiral Mishima is, in a word: Elitist. He operates under the belief that mages should be tough in themselves, and has come to head many times with superiors. He simply takes good mages as he sees them to work in his unit, seeing the Navy as the real force that can go anywhere, and do anything. And with this attitude, has pissed off many TSAB officials over the years.
It is with grudging respect however, that they allowed him to climb the chain of command to the rank of Admiral, because despite as much as they started to hate his existence, he tended to be right in his actions, and was just plain good at what he did. (It also helped that asside from being blunt and telling others, even superiors, when they were wrong... he wasn't the kind to rub it in.)

Mishima is a close range mage, and isn't afraid, even at his age, to mix it up with a threat face to face. Often shocking other fleet commanders by showing blatent disreguard for his own well being to go right into action along side his subordinates. (Which incidently, earns a lot of respect from those that worked under him.)
Mishima is the kind to 'talk with his fists'. He's always had a deep dislike for shooting and bombardment magics, thinking the fighting should be done mono-a-mono, where he can look into the eyes of an enemy. As such, he knows no projectile based magics, and has an extreme focus on bare handed fighting, creating and perfecting physical fortifying techniques he would later teach Lynn.
It is said, that at full power, Mishima's skin is as hard as steel, and could deflect blades with ease. Whether this rumor is true or not is uncertain, but Mishima does have a device. Though he dislikes the advanced devices that are available in the TSAB, he has a limited Armed Device known simply as Tekken, a dual pair of armored gauntlets to allow him to create instant shields and allow him to parry bladed magical and non-magical weapons in combat.
On top of his fighting prowess, behind that vicious facade is a cunning mind that knows how to command a unit to victory, and isn't afraid to be rutheless in his execution. He is well known for his Shock and Awe strategies in combat situations.

With an oppertunistic political strategy as ruthless as his fighting style, it's really no surprise that only a week after the death of Regius, he took advantage of the loss of a major dissent to his policies and created the Shock Enforcers, a small elite unit of, while not necissarily ace mages, but extremely tough, hand picked mages, with the sole purpose of being an offensive strike team. Headed up by Lynn, who he is impressed with and considers a prodigy.

Mishima has met Nanoha, and while he has a certain level of Contempt for Admiral Lindy's motherly doting style of command, he has respect for the mages she's brought up due to how strong they have become.

It should be noted that Admiral Mishima was ranked number one on the list of mages Jail REALLY didn't want to piss off. Despite being a madman, Jail was NOT stupid, and made it absoultely clear that nobody was to provoke Mishima. He even went so far as to ensure that Mishima's task force was decoyed well away from Mid-Childa when he began the Cradle operation. Which was probably a good thing, considering with what Jail was attempting to do, Mishima was ready to rip right through the AMF filled warship with his bare hands. (Whether or not he could have done so remains unknown, but most bets are that Quatro would have ended the day with her spine ripped out of her chest rather than slightly singed by an amplified buster attack. Mishima was NOT happy.)

ABILITIES:

Iron Will, Fist of Steel
This basic body fortification technique was first developed long ago by the Belkens, and fell out of standing some time before the war, only to be passed down among masters of small schools of the fighting arts. As a student of one of these schools at a young age, it was a technique that became the foundation of Mishima's magical combat style to this very day. Rather than concentraiting mana into a spell, or into a device or element pattern, mana is focussed into the body, increasing strength, stamina, speed, and endurance beyond what most magical combatants could call 'human'. With fifty years to perfect his use of this ability, Mishima has been known to smash through reinforced concrete from a complete standstill, and sometimes, in a rage, rip entire buildings apart during a fight, usually completely terrifying even otherwise hardened criminals. (Though it takes a moderate amount of time to tear the building apart. It classifies as more COLLATTERAL really.)

Thunderstorm Fist
As a mage with an afinity towards electrical based magic elements, it is no wonder he has the callsign 'Thunderfist'. Augmenting his magical toughening, is a form of contact based lightning element magic. Basicly turning him into a walking livewire capable of imparting a significantly high electrical discharge in a punch. While redundant in ability next to the brute force Mishima can dish out, he has found it useful occaisionally when he's had to deal with Gadget Drones and other electrically sensitive items head on.

Flash Slam
Nothing More than a modified Flash Move, Mishima has altered it's use, using the sudden speed boost to turn himself into a fast moving battering ram. Excelent for those fights where he has to close the distance.

Genocide Dance
Mishima's favorite magically enhanced combo move. It is actually a combination of his Flash Slam, shifted into a rapid flurry of Iron Will reinforced martial arts moves. Observation counts ten individual blows in five seconds, with each blow capable of doing damage to objects made of reinforced concrete. It has been seen, that when he begins execution of the Genocide Dance, most, if not all opponents fall by the final blow. He has never actually gotten to test it out on anyone considered equal to himself.

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NAME: Lynn Ayame Bardou

CALLSIGN: Thanatos 1
RANK: Captain
POSITION: Elite Enforcer Unit Special Weapons And Tactics, Shock Enforcer
AGE: 28
MAGE CLASS: AAA

From age Six, Lynn had been enchanted with the idea of becoming an enforcer. It just tickled her pink to be a bringer of justice to the unjust, and creator of peace and prosperity.

Was she ever wrong.

Lynn's basic training began at a typical age, and normal was also her training. The only abnormality was her rather generous magical abilities. Something she attributed to a little bit of home magical practice before she joined.

But the calamity was during an active duty assignment. Herself and a small squad of Beaurau mages were to corner and arrest a notorious dimensional criminal on a remote world with a culture level of zero.
Something went horribly wrong. Not only was the mission a failure, but Lynn was the only survivor, barely able to give a report a month later.

Having been only just assigned as a squad leader for the mission, she felt the failure was completely her fault, and swore to never let it happen again. The deaths of seven mages, including her best friend from training, weighed heavily on her every day she was idle.

She worked her rehabilitation of her body to the point of near torturous pain in order to get back on her feet faster, bringing herself back to her previous shape, and farther as she worked to improve her skills.

News of her recovery went through the command rings until it hit the ears of Admiral Mishima. At first the Admiral didn't so much as bat an eye, but after curiously checking the full report, set asside time to watch the girl. Not two months later did he approach her with an offer to train her in combat methods beyond what the TSAB's official courses could offer.
But it came with a price.
He wouldn't just train her... she had to prove she could handle the training.

Lynn did not only agree, she took it as a personal challenge. Admiral Mishima taught her skills he himself learned years ago in a routine that most would find simply grueling. Only the famed White Devil that was becoming famous in the TSAB would even consider a similar level of punishment as a training routine.
But Lynn didn't give up, and proved the Admiral's faith in her determination by successfully following his routine to its completion.

After his training, Lynn still needed experience, and continued operating as an Enforcer, honing the skills she'd learned, and sharpening her disapline while modifying the techniques the Admiral taught her to fit her personal style more, as he had encouraged.

The next time the Admiral would approach her, would be the week following the death of Gaias Regius, proposing her to form the team leader of his new Shock Enforcer Unit, with all the privilages and responsibilities the squadron leader position were entitled.
"You are ready to be a leader now," He told her.

Lynn is equipped with a device called Waldron, an Axe styled intelligent device that strangly, lacks the cartridge system of other devices, but is built extremely solid with some of the best engineering in the TSAB. The device weighs six times the normal for devices of equal size. Her barrier jacket has a more utilitarian style to it, stressing Mishima's very straight forward 'no frills' influence.

ABILITIES:

Armed Device (Axe) 'Waldron' : Lynn is a master of pole armed close combat. Her intelligent device, Waldron, is a fearsome single bladed battle axe with a spear point on its head that holds a vicious ability to smash, cut, and peirce through obstacles at will. Foregoing the multiple forms of other devices, Waldron has been heavily reinforced and its abilities of regeneration made more powerful to stand up to the fearsom rigors Lynn will put it through. Considering projectile magics too slow to use, costly, and ineffective, Lynn's device operates almost exclusively in contact magic attacks.

- Raven Call (Logistic/Tactical): Lynn can summon Waldron from just about anywhere. Whether it is calling it to her side in battle, calling it from the corpse of a fallen enemy, or summoning it from a pool of magma (Okay, maybe not a pool of MAGMA...) Waldron obeys, and transports itself to her grasp. The range is limited though. The Raven call requires her to outstretch her hand and whistle where the device can 'hear' her and home in on her.
- Mjolnir Impact (Contact Offensive, protection barrier and shield breaker): *Pronunciation 'MUOLL-neer Impact' *
Concentraiting magical energy into the swing and leading blade edge of Waldron, the most common magical attack (Common being reletive.) Lynn has at her disposal is nothing short of getting straight to the point at maximum force. Upon impact, it detonates the energy in one direction, much like a shaped charge, designed to cause massive stress to barriers and provoke shattering. The attack has moderate effectiveness, but increased physical striking force, cartridge shots (Provided by add ons to her barrier jacket in one mission), or time to build the attack increases the likelyhood of successful shattering. Heavy Swings are often key to maximum effect, which if redirected or dodge leave Lynn overextended, off balance, and open to a counter-attack. For maximum effect, this attack is often coupled with a full scale body rush of some kind, usually exaggerated by movement magic into the force of a freight train. Most personal protection barriers cannot stand up to this much combined stress.

BARE HANDED:
Lynn was taught by the master of bare handed combat himself, Admiral Mishima. As such, the only thing more frightening than her Axe, his her fist, and all the punishment that comes with it.

- Iron will, Iron fist (Reinforcement, condition):
One of many skills Lynn learned and adapted from Admiral Mishima... Concentraiting magical energy into her arms, legs, and hands, Lynn turns her own limbs into tools of pure destruction, able to punch straight into solid plate steel without busting a knuckle. Able to guard from bladed devices and weak magical attacks with unshielded arms, to see her charging you down, and batting stinger blades and axel shooters asside is simply a psychological horror for any conventional mage. This does require active concentraition however, and is very physically draining with extensive use. Lynn tries to limit usage to around ten seconds, and keep her fights extremely short.

- Flash Step (Movement, instantanious)
Flash Step is to Lynn, what Sonic Move, and Flash move are to other mages. Unlike normal flash moving, which carries momenum after accellerating, Flash Step litterally starts, and stops, in one step. Lynn will use it both in the air, or on the ground, to instantly cover distances to the precise spot she wishes to be in the blink of an eye. It requires extreme concentraition however, and even so much as a blink of a distraction can have her tumbling head over heals upon her exit. Actually taught to her by Mishima in the form of his Flash Slam attack, she worked hard to improve her control of the force to come to a stop, rather than just launch forward.

- Flash Dance (Movement, continuous)
Flash step taken to the extreme. It requires Lynn's entire focus and willpower to keep this technique up. She litterally moves continuously at the speed and pacing of a flash step or sonic move, appearing to be a blur at best to the average mage. Like the simplified Flash Step, if her concentraition breaks anywhere for even a moment, she goes flying. In order to keep this up, she also needs to be in Full Drive, or she'll lose speed after only a few 'steps'. Even Mishima admits this is a technique he'd never be able to match without another sixty years to go at it again.

SPECIALS/EQUIPMENT

FORE-CASTER
Just below the shoulder on each arm, one will note three dark bands apiece. These six bands are mana collectors. They gather mana over time from Lynn and feed the readied energy to a pair of gold ornaments on the back of each hand. (Four in total.)

Each of these ornaments is a pre-casting (Fore... caster.) spell holder, and can hold enough energy to cast one of Lynn's typical mid-range spells, allowing her to fire off an attack spell instantly the very moment an oppertunity presents itself.
However once discharged, these ornaments must be recharged before they can be used. Recharging actively typically takes the same amount of time as casting the spell normally. If Lynn recharges them all at once, it would take about the same amount of time as casting four mid level spells... which could take about two minutes.
Passive charging, relying on absorbing mana energy from Lynn, typically takes longer, usually about two minutes apiece... meaning it could take her up to eight minutes to fully recharge all four ornaments in a fight, so long as she doesn't immediately use the spells as they become available.
Another drawback, is that the ornaments will not maintain a charge without a constant in-flow. As soon as the mana stops flowing, the ornaments begain to lose energy. This usually isn't a problem in a fight, but must be considered both before battle, and during luls in battle. They don't start in a fully charged state. Of course, this could also be seen as a safety precaution. The ornaments containing her charges could become a hazzard if damaged, and a good hit would render them protentially explosive, just like cartridges.
For backup purposes, Lynn has two more attatched to the boot of each foot, which she could switch out with her primaries in the event of damage and insufficient time for her barrier jacket to go through the repair process.
The exact reason Lynn uses this modified version of the instant spell card system, over the proven and effective cartridge system is unknown, but perhaps it is a lingering fear of being cutoff from help, and losing the logistics support that entails. However, the ability to instantly cast a spell charge without having to go through the slow tedium of preparation in the middle of a fight has proven to be quite useful.

- Heavenly Descent (Signature Combination Move):
If Lynn has a target in her sight right at the opening of the fight, she will use this to try and start, AND FINISH, the fight. Starting from altitude, she will approach the target while applying flash dance to accellerate, build energy into Waldron for Mjolnir Strike, and then she will employ short range transfer/movement magic at the same time, and attempt to cover over a kilometer of distance to close combat range in no time flat and hit full force with Waldron...
To those who've been caught by this attack, it appears as if Lynn emerges from a fireball descending from the skies to deliver divine punishment in a single axe blow of judgement.

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Alexander Vladius Carrde

CALLSIGN: Nightmare
RANK: Leiutenant
POSITION: Information Management Specialist/Combat Illusionist.
AGE: 27
MAGE CLASS: AAA

Alex had been a very troubled child, a child with incredible talent, the talent for magic. Hailing from Victoria City, Mid-childa, an area that seemed to almost reject the very idea of Magic and Beaurau authority long after it's founding. His parents had seen him as a freak of nature, and felt ashamed of this, keeping him locked up in his formative years, and treating him like he was a special case. He developed sociopathic tendancies, even as he secretly improved his powers through the use of his imagination when he was alone, creating intracate illusions to keep himself occuepied as he read books. With the practice on his own, he eventually created illusion magic so powerful that he could alter what his environment looked like to suit his whim.
It was with great regret what happened around age nine. Terrified by one of his most frighteningly real illusions about a battle of darkness, his parents had inadvertantly thrown themselves off a balcony to escape a messy and painful death from 'demons'.
The investigation into their deaths turned out to be nothing more than officially filed as an 'accident'. Yet the TSAB saw the Potential in Alexander. He accecpted the invitation into the Beaurau, rather than be sent to some foster home.

Alexander proved to be more than most Beaurau trainers could actually handle. The boy was deeply rooted in Sociopathic tendancies as a result of his early years. He had no respect for anyone, and only listened to orders if the instructors proved to be competent, or threatening to simply drop him. But his illusions magic was something of awe. During one training session, Alexander fabricated a complete local illusion that affected twelve different people simultaniously into seeing their own personal variant to a hellish training accident, in which their own friends died in messy ways. After he pulled away the illusion and showed everyone that nothing had actually happened, all twelve people needed psychiatric treatment for Post Traumatic Stress Disorder.

It was, Admiral Mishima that finally knocked some semblance of respect into Alex. Hearing of the troublemaker, he personally went to observe this phenominal illusionist. What he found disgusted him.
Alexandler, seeing this so called 'Admiral', decided to challenge him. What transpired, had to be the single greatest humbling the boy had ever experienced. Unleashing horrendous illusionary terrors at the Admiral, he was shocked when Mishima simply scoffed them off, ignored the entire imaginary facade, and socked the frail boy full force in the face.
"You're living in a dream world boy." Were the first true words the Admiral Spoke. The Admiral took it upon himself to oversee the continuation of Alexander's training, teaching the mage tactics and information management, true skills to fit his ability to manipulate the information of his environment, all the while solidifying Alex's respect for the aging Admiral.

As he grew, so did his mastery and creativity. Instead of exaggerated illusionary horrors, Alex turned his illusions towards the subtle, creating dynamic scenarios against real opponents with the subtle maddening effect of the dripping water faucet you just can't stop. Along with this came assistance from trained shooting mages in the arts of defensive shooting magic. Carrde earned his true callsight, Nightmare, and his position as one of Mishima's best to earn a spot on the Shock Enforcers as Thanatos 2.

Hardenned by Mishima's influence, Alexander finds it difficult to respect most people, seeing them as hypocrites. Respect from him must be earned, by deeds, not words.

Alexander is armed with two devices. Teppes, a pair of sunglasses that act as amplifiers to his illusionary magic, allow him to broadcast his illusions to a large area... and Baskerville, his armed device: The culmination of his shooting skills, a small powerful magical hand gun with a built in AI to assist him. Though he rarely uses the two in concert to their fullest ability, the very idea of not knowing exactly what's going on, and that he may shoot you right in the back in the middle of it would be unnerving even to hardened aces.

ABILITIES:

- Illusion Magic (Basic)
Basic Illusion magic. Conventional Decoys, even multiples, are easy for him.

- Obfuscate
Like decoy illusion magic, but Alexander found something of a reversal to it. Instead of projecting images of himself, he'd project images of his environment onto himself, and appear invisable.

- Dooms-Daydream
This is pretty much his signature ability. The ability he developed as a child to completely shift the perception of those in the environment around him. An ability he can use to completely isolate and terrify his opponents, confuse, trap, and otherwise screw with their heads. He enjoys watching his enemies squirm when he does it, and in fact, as his euphoria increases, so does the strength and complexity of the illusion. (It's Adrenaline Rush.)

- Flight
Alexander has been taught to fly, and he loves to make use of it. Alexander can often be found floating, hovering, flying, or just plain reclining in mid air as if sitting in a chair.

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Abbigail Granger

CALLSIGN: Wyatt Earp -or- Wyatt (Thanatos 3)
RANK Leiutenant
POSITION: Precision Marksman, ranged shooting specialist.
AGE: 24
MAGE CLASS: C

'Abby' grew up on a sparsely populated world a considerable distance from Mid-Childa. A world that for the most part, still Wild by modern terms. As such, from an early age, she learned how to use firearms. Often practicing with pistols and target shooting, even competing in target and speed shooting competitions. A bit of a tomboy, she would often adventure out into the woods and fields surrounding her home town with her favorite pistol strapped to her hip.
It became clear just how advanced her marksmanship skills were during Admiral Mishima's investigation into a Mass Weapons smuggling ring that had been illegially exporting arms off the planet. One of his investigative mages had become lost from the main search group in the forest near Abby's home, and had been attacked by one of the larger, magic sensitive animals that lived there. The Beaurau mage was saved by a precision hip shot from Abbigail's rated .45 calibur revolver to the creature's head, from a hundred meters away. Abby had never thought anything of the shot. Mishima was impressed. (Mishima is NEVER impressed.) He gave her the option to join the TSAB.
Being adventurous, she jumped at the offer to see new worlds, and was quickly sent to Mid-Childa for training.
During the qualifications and training to become a shooting mage, the full extent of her abilities were tested. Abby barely ranks C class in magical ability, barely enough power to create magic bullets, let alone fight as a combat mage... and to make matters more complicated, her trusty pistol was considered illegal in the TSAB. In order to compensate for this, Mishima had her pistol redesigned as a magical device.. The concept was so identical to the mechanics Abbigail had been used to all her life that she made the switch in a single practice session, successfully scoring EXPERT rating in from the hip shooting rated for magic rifle users and qualifying with hip shots against sniper rated targets.

With the help of a customized quickloader, Abby is capable of firing six shots, reloading her cartridges, and unloading those following six downrange, accurately, in under three seconds, making her the fastest, and most accurate hip-shooter in the TSAB. It's a shame her custom mini-cartridges are more expensive than the generic ones. However, it has been arranged for her to have a more powerful shotgun styled device in the times when she needs more firepower, and that uses normal cartridges.

Abby is quite a sweet character, loving to talk to people, and an equal love of shooting, but she hates to fight. She'd rather have a fun target shooting competition than incapacitate people. However, when she decides to fight, even melee fighters have come to respect he inexorable skill with her revolver. She's also quite a well endowed individual, which helps to further disarm unsuspecting opponents.

Abby is number three of Thanatos Squadron of the Shock Enforcers, earning the position on raw skill over any magical talent.

DEVICES:

-THUNDER SIX-
Six Shot, cartridge powered revolver. Armed device. Takes custom made mini cartridges to produce magic bullets.

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-FLANAGAN-
Shotgun styled shooting device, uses full sized cartridges.

ABILITIES:

SHOOTING:
Barely ranking any magical power, Abbigail has to rely almost exclusively on her own physical skill and outstanding accuracy. In fact, as mentioned, her devices require miniature cartridge shots just for the power to fire a single magic bullet, making an extended fight for her a potential logistics breakdown. Thankfully, her speed and accuracy in all aspects of shooting make even trained soldiers gawk. Hip shots are tough enough, as are hundred meter shots with pistols. But hip-shots at a hundred meters with a pistol are something few have ever been able to claim.

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About the only extra magical trick she really knows, is boosted jumping skills, which she abuses to no end with silly acrobatics displays.

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Gray Edwards

CALLSIGN: Ninjamaster (Thanatos 4)
RANK: Leiutenant
POSITION: Infiltration and Close Combat Support, Shock Enforcers
AGE: 30
MAGE CLASS: B

Considered one of the TSAB's successful failure's Leitenant Gray Edwards of the Shock Enforcers, is a case of one man's ego and dreams far exceding his attitude.
From a young age, Gray was obsessed with Ninja. So much so that he went to great lengths to find all the resources he could on them, and learn their techniques.
Over this time, he found mountains of fictional information, with sprinkles of truth. Training himself through some of the most idiotic routines imaginable. It would come to pass, that through all of this, Gary completely failed at becoming the skilled master ninja legend he'd been dreaming of.
However, through all this training, his body had become the peak of human fitness, and even with all the foolish techniques, he has picked up a few natural ninja techniques. Despite being six feet tall, he is exceptionally quiet, and capable of moving through crowded areas completely undetected. The TSAB were quick to snatch up this raw potential when he finally applied.

Unfortunately, they learned one of the reasons WHY he wasn't a legendary ninja master. His attitude. Gray likes two things, showing off, and girls. While his skills aren't legendary, his ego sure is. Gray will often do extremely risky stunts, and act with more brazen competency than he has shown in actual merit, often getting him into situations where he has been forced to literally fight his way out, more than once.... often getting beaten up quite badly and losing face in the process. It has been noted that litterally, in the official record, if he ever says the words 'watch this...', something bad will probably happen.

Only lately under the strict guidance of Admiral Mishima has Gray mellowed out quite a bit and grown more into his potential as a close combat infiltrator, adding an edge of dissapline he so desperately needed to rise to his earlier dreams and expectations.

As far as mages go, he's mediocre at best. Unable to fly, but able to wield enough magic to be useful, he relies heavily on his strength, skill, and size to do his dirty work. His armed device, which he personally named Murasami after a Ninja blade in one of his refferences, is his primary means of combat, a deviced-up Katana style blade capable of launching weak magic attacks with a swing or a stab. Most of his fighting skill is learned through practice as a TSAB enforcer under Admiral Mishima.
His most noted ability though, comes from years of stupid 'watch this' moments, an extemely high tolerance for pain, and a natural damage soaker of sorts, especially when enraged. He's taken more physical injuries, and managed to continue through the pain until he's managed to show off just how hardcore he really is. While it has been noted to be foolish, the fact that he could do so even after having an arm mangled to the point where other people would go into shock has earned him a 'small' base of respect.

- Abilities

Ninja LIGHT: Gray knows a few skills, such as absolute silence, balance, power jumping, and advanced unsupported climbing. Along with his top level physical fitness, he is quite tough before magic comes into the equation.

Demonic Strike: Gray's magical Limit Break is pretty much the only high level magic he can really pull off. An amplified magical airburst similar to a buster barrel shot... the attack actually has mechanics similar to Nanoha's Starlight Breaker, in that asside from base level mana, it pulls magical energy out of the environment to power the full brunt of the attack. The attack is actually quite flashy, tearing up rocks and concrete around him as he prepares to strike, and glowing with electical sparks, before unleashing a flaming blast.
Unfortunately, the attack is more flashy than powerful, just like Gray... having actually ONLY the power of a mid-level buster attack, and after using it just once, Gray is pretty much completely wiped out, and immediately drops. It has been known to psych out his opponents though. Making them waste way too much mana in defense, or simply cowering in fear.

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Xiro, pictured here with Fragrach in its basic form.

Name: Xiro Alistair
Nicknames: The North Wind of the TSAB
Gender: Male
Species: Human
Age: 23
Height: 6’3”
Weight: 175 lbs
Skin: Pale
Hair: Blue
Eyes: Red
Device: Fragrach
Magic System: Neo-Belka
Ranking: AAA
Moral Alignment: Neutral Good

Xiro is a young man from a world just beyond the outer rim of the TSAB’s sphere of influence. Born into a wealthy family and raised by neglectful parents, Xiro grew tired of his existence and ran away from home when he was nine years old, enlisting in the TSAB’s Ground Forces Academy.

Despite having only the most basic magical education, Xiro quickly proved himself to possess a great deal of natural talent, as well as a coveted wind-elemental affinity which allowed him to rise through the ranks quickly upon his graduation. He continued his education following his graduation from the GFA, putting himself through Air Forces special training and advancing to the coveted position of Supreme Air Force Aggressor by the time he was seventeen years old.

Shortly after being placed in the SAFA, Xiro was partnered with Takamachi Nanoha. While his “partner in crime” was more interested in training new recruits than in testing new weaponry, Xiro took the opposite route, becoming a test pilot for a wide array of new advancements, including the prototype of the Blaster System, which he recommended to Nanoha under the condition that she exercise extreme caution in its’ usage.

It was during this brief time, however, that Xiro also began to develop strong feelings for his coworker. Attracted to Nanoha by her eternally-upbeat attitude and positive outlook on life (among many many other reasons), Xiro managed to ask Nanoha out on several “friendly outings” together, which Nanoha accepted under the belief that she was merely spending time with a friend. It wasn’t until several weeks into their one-sided relationship that Xiro happened to catch Nanoha and Fate in the middle of a private moment, shattering any illusions he’d had that Nanoha returned his feelings.

As if to grind his face further into the mud, word came from his home planet around the same time that a Lost Logia had been set loose without the Bureau’s notice not far from his hometown. Under the pretense of returning to help his family deal with the aftermath, Xiro resigned his commission and returned home, putting as much distance as possible between himself and the remnants of his shattered heart.

In the four years since then, Xiro has largely gotten over Nanoha, though he has no intentions of returning to the TSAB, as the locals depend on him greatly to defend them from frequent Shadow attacks. At present time he is working as a freelance mage on his home world of Radient Garden.

Xiro’s personality is largely a reflection of his element; like the wind, he is wild and relatively carefree, taking an easygoing attitude to most things in life. He is often quite blunt and to-the-point, and occasionally comes across as being completely tactless.

Xiro has idolized stories of the old Belkan Knights since his early childhood, and fancies himself a successor to the knights in his stories, particularly the legendary Helix Knights. As such, he takes his honor very seriously, and always keeps a promise once he’s made it. While he isn’t exactly a knight in shining armor, he does have a healthy dose of chivalry in him, and takes great enjoyment in playing the hero.

Xiro takes great enjoyment out of battle and the thrill of competition, and is quick to work himself into a frenzy whenever a fight breaks out. He is noted as one of the few mages in the TSAB who had any chance of outflying the Aces, mostly due to his ingenious usage of his wind-element spells to enhance his speed and mobility.

Xiro’s powerset revolves largely around his wind-elemental spells and his incredible speed. Xiro’s fighting style is as freeform and flexible as the wind itself. He can strike and fade like a sudden breeze, or unleash his rage with the explosive power of a hurricane. In battle he is extremely agile and skilled with his spear, Fragrach, and uses his wind-element spells to boost his speed and agility further than almost any mage in the entire bureau.

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Device: Fragrach
Type: Storage
Magical Color: Scarlet
A.I. Characteristics: Fragrach is based on the form of a heavily-modified Storage device, and as such it contains a very limited A.I. possessing only the most basic functions. Unlike other Storage-type devices, however, Fragrach possesses multiple forms, a result of modifications Xiro made to the device’s frame and internal workings during his time as a member of the SAFA.

Storage Form: A small red arrowhead necklace.

Basic Form: A simple red spear with a bladed head on one end and a blunted tip on the other. The blade allows Xiro to use Fragrach as a cutting weapon as much as a piercing one.

Advanced Form: Xiro breaks Fragrach into two halves, which regenerate and reform into a pair of spears identical to Fragrach’s basic form.

Full Drive Form: Each of Fragrach’s two halves breaks into three parts which regenerate into a grand total of six lances. These lances differ greatly from Fragrach’s basic form, having a trio of blades arranged in a triangular pattern on one end and a bladed spearhead which vaguely resembles a dragon’s head on the other. Xiro typically holds only one or two of these lances at once and holds the others in a firm telekinetic grip, though he will sometimes control all six with his telekinesis at the same time.

Telekinesis: The basis of many of Xiro’s abilities and the most fundamental part of his arsenal. Xiro’s telekinesis is a product of his wind affinity, which is at heart the manipulation of kinetic energy. Xiro possesses an extremely high degree of power and control with his telekinesis, and uses this ability to manipulate his lances, launch attacks, turn the environment into an arsenal of weapons, and turn off the alarm clock when he’s too lazy to get out of bed, among many other uses. While Xiro is able to use this ability on people as well as objects, any form of magical protection (such as a barrier jacket) is sufficient to disrupt his control and prevent him from flinging his enemies around like ragdolls.

Slipstream: One of the secrets to Xiro’s speed. Slipstream is a wind-element speed boost spell that creates a bubble of air around Xiro. This bubble diverts the air in front of him away from Xiro while he is in flight, effectively reducing his drag to zero and allowing him to fly at incredibly high speeds.

Zero Shift: Xiro’s Flash Move equvilant. Identical in most respects to other forms of extreme-speed spells, Zero Shift has the additional effect of obscuring Xiro’s form while in movement due to the large amounts of air this spell displaces while in use.

Physical Heal: Xiro is well-versed in basic healing magic and can completely heal small wounds or stem blood loss from larger ones.

Struggle Bind: Xiro’s only binding spell, identical to Yuuno’s and Chrono’s spells of the same name. Xiro hasn’t completely mastered this spell, and must maintain his focus on the target to prevent the bind from unravelling.

Reinforcement: A standard Belkan spell every knight worth their weapon knows. Reinforcement is the art of using one’s magical energies to reinforce their bodies and weapons, making themselves faster, stronger, and more durable. Xiro usually uses this power to boost his strength and endurance, though ironically he’s not so good at boosting his speed with this spell. He can also reinforce his eyes, ears, and nose to sharpen his senses, and Fragrach to boost its’ durability.

Sky Waltz: A basic platform spell Xiro used in his days in the GFA. Simple to the point where Xiro can conjure dozens with a thought, Xiro primarily uses these to make sudden changes in direction while in flight. For a slightly increased mana cost, the spells can be imbued with a springboard effect, causing anything that hits them to bounce off on a wild trajectory. Chains of these spells can be set up to create a pinball effect, as an enemy is bounced from one platform to the next without the chance to regain their bearings.

Knight’s Garb: Much like the Wolkenritter, Xiro prefers to rely on his speed more than his armor, and dresses lightly for battle so as to not interfere with his movements. His knight’s garb consists of a simple blue bodysuit adorned with steel embroidery along the arms, legs, and torso, with a pair of large metal shoulder pauldrons being the most solid piece of armor in his entire ensemble.

Thunder Shock: A wind-element spell similar to Vita’s Eisengeheul, this spell creates a ball of highly-pressurized air which Xiro can detonate on command, effectively acting as a magical flashbang grenade. The spell is named for the sound the spell makes on detonation, that of a crack of thunder. Fragrach is programmed to recognize the casting of this spell and redirect extra power to Xiro’s knight armor, allowing him to detonate this spell at short range and not suffer any ill effects.

Tempest Blade: Xiro uses Fragrach as the base of a powerful anti-magic shield while whirling the spear in front of him to deflect physical attacks.

Cyclone Blade: A powered-up version of Tempest Blade used with Fragrach in its Full Drive form. Here, the spell is layered across the six lances creating a multi-level shield with extremely high defensive power against magic damage. The six whirling lances also make attacking in melee a daunting prospect, and a careless adversary may be cut to ribbons by the dancing blades. Classified as an S-rank shield spell, this is one of the most powerful spells in Xiro’s arsenal.

Turbulence: The second secret to Xiro’s speed. By itself, this is simply a blast of kinetic energy akin to Subaru Nakajima’s Revolver Cannon, though it is classified as a shooting spell and not a magic-enhanced attack spell. When used this way, it has considerable power and can easily knock a target through multiple concrete walls.

However, Xiro most commonly uses this spell as a speed boost while in flight. By reversing the flow of kinetic energy in the spell template, disabling Fragrach’s recoil compensator and launching a modified version of this spell off his back while in flight, Xiro effectively creates a magical afterburner which is powerful enough (when used in concert with Slipstream) to propel him at speeds just under Mach 1 for brief periods of time.

Invisible Air: One of Xiro’s most commonly-used spells, this AA-ranked spell involves conjuring a lance of wind and hurling it like a javelin. Because it is made of air, it is impossible to see (save for a slightly visible disturbance in the air) and can only be dodged by judging the angle of Xiro’s throw. Possesses decent penetration power, but can be blocked by most autoguard spells. The lance can also be used as an improvised melee weapon if Xiro is disarmed.

Sonic Buster: A shooting spell nearly identical in form and function to Subaru Nakajima’s Revolver Shoot spell, this spell creates a wave of kinetic energy with considerable destructive force.

Sonic Slasher: While spinning Fragrach in a circle at high speeds, wind magic is concentrated around the blade and released in the form of a series of blades of wind. Similar in form to Invisible Air, these blades are quite weak individually, and gain most of their power from the fact that they are both invisible and typically launched in large numbers. Classified as a B-rank shooting spell.

Storm Sickle: A magic-enhanced attack spell classified as AAA-rank, this spell imbues Fragrach with large amounts of magical energy as the spear is whirled over Xiro’s head. The spear is then released as a thrown projectile, transforming into a deadly six-foot long buzzsaw which is guided by Xiro’s telekinesis.

Typhoon Sickle: The most powerful offensive spell in Xiro’s arsenal at present time, Typhoon Sickle is an upgraded version of Storm Sickle used with Fragrach in its’ Full Drive form. The enhanced attack status is applied to all six of Xiro’s lances, which are launched and guided with his telekinesis as per Storm Sickle.

Alright, here's the latest headbanger for the haxxbusters to have fun with. If anybody looks at this and doesn't see a AAA-rank for whatever reason, try to keep in mind that Xiro (pronounced "Zero", just so we're clear) is supposed to have gained his rank through an absurd level of skill in melee, not through beamspam and overwhelming power.

ghazghkull

2008-05-19, 20:57

Despite having only the most basic magical education, Xiro quickly proved himself to possess a great deal of natural talent, as well as a coveted wind-elemental affinity which allowed him to rise through the ranks quickly upon his graduation. He continued his education following his graduation from the GFA, putting himself through Air Forces special training and advancing to the coveted position of Supreme Air Force Aggressor by the time he was seventeen years old.

This isn't even HAXX. Your execution on this particular trait of Xiro is nothing but sheer stupidity.

How does one jump from the Ground Forces AKA the ARMY to the AIR FORCE?! Explain to me, how exactly does one, who has been trained in the art of war meant for the Ground, suddenly jump into training for something meant for the Air Force?!

Shortly after being placed in the SAFA, Xiro was partnered with Takamachi Nanoha. While his “partner in crime” was more interested in training new recruits than in testing new weaponry, Xiro took the opposite route, becoming a test pilot for a wide array of new advancements, including the prototype of the Blaster System, which he recommended to Nanoha under the condition that she exercise extreme caution in its’ usage.

Okay that's just breaking canon into your own storyline.

The Blaster System, was Nanoha's own design! The Blaster System is part of Raising Heart, just as Excellion, Aggressor, and Exceed are part of the system that is known as Raising Heart.

Another thing, it's Nanoha's JOB to test every single new weapons system that comes through her department.

Device: Fragrach
Type: Storage
Magical Color: Scarlet
A.I. Characteristics: Fragrach is based on the form of a heavily-modified Storage device, and as such it contains a very limited A.I. possessing only the most basic functions. Unlike other Storage-type devices, however, Fragrach possesses multiple forms, a result of modifications Xiro made to the device’s frame and internal workings during his time as a member of the SAFA.

Storage Form: A small red arrowhead necklace.

Basic Form: A simple red spear with a bladed head on one end and a blunted tip on the other. The blade allows Xiro to use Fragrach as a cutting weapon as much as a piercing one.

Advanced Form: Xiro breaks Fragrach into two halves, which regenerate and reform into a pair of spears identical to Fragrach’s basic form.

Full Drive Form: Each of Fragrach’s two halves breaks into three parts which regenerate into a grand total of six lances. These lances differ greatly from Fragrach’s basic form, having a trio of blades arranged in a triangular pattern on one end and a bladed spearhead which vaguely resembles a dragon’s head on the other. Xiro typically holds only one or two of these lances at once and holds the others in a firm telekinetic grip, though he will sometimes control all six with his telekinesis at the same time.

FRAGRACH?! HAVE YOU ACTUALLY SEEN Fate/Hallow Atraxia?!!!! Fragrach is a bloody blade! Not some three piece Lance!

Slipstream: One of the secrets to Xiro’s speed. Slipstream is a wind-element speed boost spell that creates a bubble of air around Xiro. This bubble diverts the air in front of him away from Xiro while he is in flight, effectively reducing his drag to zero and allowing him to fly at incredibly high speeds.

Okay you had better do better research on how to reduce drag, because a simple bubble shape won't do it. I will leave it at that.

Zero Shift: Xiro’s Flash Move equvilant. Identical in most respects to other forms of extreme-speed spells, Zero Shift has the additional effect of obscuring Xiro’s form while in movement due to the large amounts of air this spell displaces while in use.

Okay...explain to me PHYSICALLY how does the AIR around is distort images for a sustained flight?!

Watch this video. Although there are distortions, it's BEHIND the jet in this video.

wHrwgRsX0BI

Reinforcement: A standard Belkan spell every knight worth their weapon knows. Reinforcement is the art of using one’s magical energies to reinforce their bodies and weapons, making themselves faster, stronger, and more durable. Xiro usually uses this power to boost his strength and endurance, though ironically he’s not so good at boosting his speed with this spell. He can also reinforce his eyes, ears, and nose to sharpen his senses, and Fragrach to boost its’ durability.

What a moot spell, and such a direct copy of Shirou's Reinforcement Sorcery.

Enough said.

Thunder Shock: A wind-element spell similar to Vita’s Eisengeheul, this spell creates a ball of highly-pressurized air which Xiro can detonate on command, effectively acting as a magical flashbang grenade. The spell is named for the sound the spell makes on detonation, that of a crack of thunder. Fragrach is programmed to recognize the casting of this spell and redirect extra power to Xiro’s knight armor, allowing him to detonate this spell at short range and not suffer any ill effects.

Do you even know what in the world creates a "crack of thunder"? Most definitely not wind! Plus, Eisengeheul is generating an actual sound, which is amplified to stunning levels through Vita's magic.

Tempest Blade: Xiro uses Fragrach as the base of a powerful anti-magic shield while whirling the spear in front of him to deflect physical attacks.

Cyclone Blade: A powered-up version of Tempest Blade used with Fragrach in its Full Drive form. Here, the spell is layered across the six lances creating a multi-level shield with extremely high defensive power against magic damage. The six whirling lances also make attacking in melee a daunting prospect, and a careless adversary may be cut to ribbons by the dancing blades. Classified as an S-rank shield spell, this is one of the most powerful spells in Xiro’s arsenal.

Very unoriginal.

I'm not going to even look at the other stuff, because I'm getting a bloody headache out of this.

This is NOT an Original Character. This is an amalgamation of various Fate/stay night references, along with pointless add-ons, and serious breach of canon.

You need to seriously stop taking major references, and make up your own concepts. All of my characters, all of Keroko's characters, heck almost everyone's characters are original. Their physical appearances may be based off of other material, but none of them uses the traits that those characters are known for.

They are unique.

They are different from the character that their appearances were based from.

They are ORIGINAL.

There is a second meaning to OC besides Outer Cadia: ORIGINAL CHARACTER

Liingo

2008-05-19, 21:58

Ghaz, calm down mate... (actually you're probably calm but that's beside the point :uhoh:)

You need to seriously stop taking major references, and make up your own concepts. All of my characters, all of Keroko's characters, heck almost everyone's characters are original. Their physical appearances may be based off of other material, but none of them uses the traits that those characters are known for. I should take this time to point out that just about everything imagianable has been thought up by someone else already so inevitably you're going to have some parallels to characters in other worlds. The trick is to come up with a combination that is fairly unique.

Also on the Reinforcement technique that Cort has included, I would say that the majority of the Belkan OC's will have a similar spell so your point is rather moot. It's in canon already so there's no point re-inventing something that already works. If you're making it better in some way, well that's a different kettle of fish ;)

Need to get to class now so I'll be back later.

Comartemis

2008-05-19, 23:06

*Is blown away by ghaz's yelling*

Clearly I need to think about this a bit more if there's so much wrong with this idea. Now let's break this down piece by piece.

How does one jump from the Ground Forces AKA the ARMY to the AIR FORCE?! Explain to me, how exactly does one, who has been trained in the art of war meant for the Ground, suddenly jump into training for something meant for the Air Force?!
I am under the impression that GFA is essentially combat magic school for beginners. If you have the talent to become an Air mage, you can then move into the Air forces, where the workload and, hence, magical stresses on the body are generally higher. I specifically remember something being said about how you have to be at least an A-rank mage to get into the Air Force right off the bat, which implies that a transfer from the GFA is not only possible but probably rather common, since natural A-ranks and above (our beloved Aces for instance) are going to be as rare as hen's teeth.

If you have definite proof that that's not the case, by all means show it to me and I'll take this back to the drawing board.

The Blaster System, was Nanoha's own design! The Blaster System is part of Raising Heart, just as Excellion, Aggressor, and Exceed are part of the system that is known as Raising Heart.
The entry I read for the SAFA says that they "test new weapon systems and tactics". To my way of thinking, the Blaster System is something Nanoha is essentially putting through a rather rigorous field test.

Also....
The Blaster System is part of Raising Heart
So was the cartridge system. You mean to tell me that the CVK-72 never got put through testing before Raising Heart got one installed? Puh-lease. All Xiro did was put the BS through field testing before handing it off to Nanoha, he didn't invent the bloody thing.

Another thing, it's Nanoha's JOB to test every single new weapons system that comes through her department.
No, it's the job of the SAFAs in general. If you've got a pair of mages partnered up and working together, why not have each handle the work that they like the most, assuming that it doesn't otherwise interfere with their duties?

FRAGRACH?! HAVE YOU ACTUALLY SEEN Fate/Hallow Atraxia?!!!! Fragrach is a bloody blade! Not some three piece Lance!
No, but I have taken a quick glance at the Ullster cycle. Fragarach is a blade that grants it's wielder control over the wind. Are you seeing the reference now?

And calm down before you give yourself a hernia, ghaz.

Okay you had better do better research on how to reduce drag, because a simple bubble shape won't do it. I will leave it at that.
*epic facepalm*

It's called "magic" ghaz. It doesn't necessarily have to work the way real life does, you know?

What a moot spell, and such a direct copy of Shirou's Reinforcement Sorcery.
....yeah..... and your point is?

Okay...explain to me PHYSICALLY how does the AIR around is distort images for a sustained flight?!
Go back and rewatch that video of Sora vs Xaldin, ghaz. He's actually teleporting and creating the same effect. How? Well gee, I dunno....could it be magic?

Do you even know what in the world creates a "crack of thunder"? Most definitely not wind!
Sound, ghaz. It sounds like a crack of thunder, it is not a crack of thunder. That would be the domain of lightning spells.

I'm not going to even look at the other stuff, because I'm getting a bloody headache out of this.
If something as minor as a flawed idea is giving you a headache, then you need to calm down and stop taking this so seriously, ghaz.

Tk3997

2008-05-19, 23:14

New thread huh? Eh nothing new for me I can still recall some old forum RPs were we went to three or even four threads.

Anyway Index Repost time:
TK's Crap:
Characters:
This info pertains to these OC just before and after the end of StrikerS
Garm Team:

The Garm team is a semi-independent mercenary unit under contract to the TSAB to replace some of the recent losses inflicted in various relic related incidents. They tend to specialize in investigations and covert operations on non-administered worlds… (harder for people on those to sue) Their job description is similar to enforcers in many ways though they rarely operate alone.

They’ve been kept away from and minimally involved with the relic incidents, since so many of the TSAB’s top tier players and larger amounts of resources are already involved in said incidents; because of that though other more mundane problems have begun to get out of hand in certain areas. The world doesn’t stop just because one nutter with a god complex enters the scene after all. Garm has spent most of it’s time off world doing grunt work like busting up smuggling operations and pirates, handling more mundane Lost Logia, and serving high risk warrants and such.

Basiclly maintaining order and keeping things from falling apart while all the big shots play at being heroes.

Current Roster:
Team Leader: Tony “Cipher” Jones
-Ranged Specialist, good at making people and stuff disappear, in a very spectacular way.
2IC: Harry “Solo Wing Pixy” Folk
-CC Specialist Cipher’s number two, makes sure no one gets close while the above is laying the smack down, also likes to occasionally dice some baddies himself.
Number 3: Felix “I don’t need no damn nickname” Munro
-Also a Ranged Specialist and also good at making stuff disappear but in a slightly less spectacular way then Cipher.
Number 4: Alan “Shorty” Aiken
-Another Close Combat type, also tasked with keeping stuff away from his flight lead, not quite as good at chopping stuff up on his own though.
Unofficial Number 5: Atuwe “Paperboy” Bilford
-Not technically listed but at this point coerced into operating with them so much he might as well be. Rarely acutally takes the field instead normally functioning mostly in operating sensors, monitoring friendly and possibly enemy comms, and such. Is more active outside of battle often handling intelligence gathering be it good old fashion breaking and entering or more modern methods such as hacking into databases.

Tony Estrada (See Profile)

Name: Harry Folk
Other names/alias: Garm-2, Solo-Wing Pixy
Age: 37
Birthday: June 15
Height: 5’10
Weight: 165 Pounds
Eye color: Green
Hair color: Dusty Blond
Origin: Administered World 167
Mage Rank: S
Magic Type: Belka
Magic Color: Red
Element Preference: none
Affiliation: Independent Mercenary, currently under a fairly long term contract to the TSAB.
Position/rank in TSAB: Ciphers 2IC is afforded respect somewhere around that of a Lieutenant
Team Position: 2IC and close combat specialist

Device:
Name: Morgan
Type: Armed
Appearance:
Stored: A small switch blade (and totally usable as a weapon in said form)
Active: A fairly simple longsword with a white blade and a red hilt with a pair of upward slanted cross guards. Cartages are contained in two extensions jutting up a few inches from the hilt onto the flats of the blade and eject downward from the pummel after use.
Modes:
Only the above, once active the sword is the only form it takes.
Personality:
Pixy is an often jovial likeable sort of fellow that can crack jokes and see the lighter side of situations; he’s also a hardened killer unrepentant of his sometimes gruesome profession or most of his past. He’d buy you a drink at a bar and then try and kill you the next day if he happened to encounter on the wrong side of a battle, and if you and him both survived and met up back at the bar later he’d buy you another drink.

Wised to the sometimes less pleasant side of world, but not quite broken by it he knows how things often are but can still be optimistic about what the future might hold. This wasn’t always the case and it took a beating and a near death experience to reach this level of enlightenment, but hey no pain no gain right? Overall he tends to view his life now as a second chance and attempts to live it well and thoroughly. Some might ask why he then keeps venturing onto the battlefield, but it’s quite simple though really. Life just isn’t worth living if it’s boring.

Pixy isn’t as optimistic as Cipher often is nor as cynical as Felix and serves as something a mediator between them able to see an interact with both men’s point of view while still keeping his own. He’s extremely loyal to both as well and will assist either in an instant if the need is truly great, no matter the consequences. Still his loyalty to Cipher is foremost and he won’t argue with or questions the man’s decisions once they’re well and truly made.

Felix Munro:
See Separate Profile

Alan Aiken:
See Separate Profile

Name: Atuwe Bilford
Other names/alias: Pixy has taken to calling him Paperboy
Age: 28
Birthday: March 16
Height: 5’ 8”
Weight: 150
Eye color: Brown
Hair color: Black
Origin: 75th Administered world
Mage Rank: C+
Magic Type: Mid-Childa
Magic Color: Yellow
Element Preference: none.
Affiliation: Independent, but heavily involved in the Garm teams operations.
Position/rank in TSAB: None

History and Personality:
Atuwe has always had an intense interest about but only middling skill in magic, too weak to easily gain entry into the TSAB and discouraged to do so by his wealthy parents in any case he mostly trained himself while doing allot of research and writing on magic news, history, and use. Most of it contained on a website he’s maintained since his late teens which today is a widely visited and known site for various topics about magic it has a small volunteer staff, forums, and also houses his own blog (now the biggest draw to the site).

It was through that site be became involved with Felix and intern the Garm team, Atuwe came from a wealthy family and his parents and such were quite willing to support his hobbies and such. Said hobbies included traveling to all manners of planets for research, interviews, etc. It was on one of these trips he heard of a supposedly skilled local mage working freelance, bored and on a whim he decided to seek him out and see if he could get an interview. He did, and during it he learned about Felix’s association with several other mages of note in a war that occurred a number of years ago out on the fringe, intrigued he descended deeper and was soon snared into the teams twisted web.

During his various travels he’s made allot of contacts and gotten quite good at conducting research as well, and his family itself has more contacts still. This proved useful and Garm soon began duping him into conducting research and investigations for them (an area most of the team was less then skilled in). Before he knew it he was spending as much time hoping around from planet to planet helping them in investigations as he was doing anything else, but on the plus side it provided some damn good content for his site… and it was pretty cool, even if he’d never admit it openly.

He personality tends toward the low key, he’s an observer most of all as he watches and hears everything around him, and he has a stellar memory. He rarely stands out in a crowd and the most offensive he’ll normally get is dry sarcasm, it’s very rare for him to get out and out angry, and even then he prefers sarcasm to screaming.

Skills:
As he lacked raw magical talent Atuwe has sought to use what he has to the maximum, part of this involves fairly intense training and study, but another way he dose this is focusing on often neglected areas, after all if you’re the only one doing something you’re automatically the best at it… One area in which he excels is in the manipulation of electronics with magic his writings and activities in this area are acutally regarded by some as ground breaking.

By having an intense understanding of the way in which computers function it’s possible to use magic to manipulate them at so basic a level as make almost any system hackable. He isn’t dealing with code, or programs, he’s directly manipulating the electromagnetic fields that form the very basis of the computers operations, effectively bypassing all higher architecture and security measures. This is extremely computationally intensive though and only possible with the aid of a device with a very large amount of computing horsepower. The user provides the needed magical energy and directs the effort but the device is what translates his intentions into action at the microscopic level this kind of hacking functions at.

There is no real computational defense against this attack, since it rewrites the computers programming a level below even binary no software based defense would function and any hardware that relies on electromagnetic forces (pretty much all of it) is vulnerable. The only real defense is being totally off the net and behind heavy shielding (to prevent wireless accesses, as a rule of thumb if a low power radio wave can reach the inside of his intended target he can manipulate it), or spreading the data to multiple independent systems, though the later simply buys time by forcing the hacker to crack each in turn.

The best defense is another hacker, who can counter and scramble the attempts to manipulate the fields and rewrite any changes, but being a somewhat new field they’re a limited number of such people available and they tend to get snatched up by the highest priority targets, leaving most of the net near defenseless against this sort of attack. This makes it rather easy for someone with talent and some time to get allot of information, and of coruse this kind of thing is TOTALLY illegal to do on stuff you don’t own, but hackers don’t often care too much about such trite things as legality.

This skills use in battle varies wildly, devices aren’t based entirely on computational systems, the magical competent tends to render them largely immune to this effect, at least to a point, that said the more complex the device the more sustainable it becomes to manipulation. The problem is this kind of things requires intense focus, the user is often almost trance like while “diving” the target system, this is NOT a good position to be in when people are firing off energy beams and trying to stab you. Long Range attacks are only possible with something that can carry the energies used to the target, usually either some kind of cable or a very high powered wireless system, the former is clearly impossible and the later is problematic since the mage can easily just move behind stuff, or move out of the beam, or just move so much the beam can’t stay on target to begin with, etc, etc.

As such Atuwe normally steers clear of battle, but he has proven his worth as a controller and ease dropping tool. Another area he’s studied heavily is telepathy it’s a common skill, but one most reach a certain level in and then simply tend to ignore he’s mastered it to a considerable degree and can often reliably ease drop on enemy communication via it, further increasing his intelligence gather skills.

He also studies a number of stealth and evasion techniques and is rather fit and spry which makes him an excellent burglar as he’s recently discovered… He used to use them mostly to get photos of people that didn’t want their photo taken. (Not in a perverted way mind… usually)

He’s also a mean bookworm and he can plow through research materials to get at the important stuff damn fast, another task he often finds himself performing. At this point he’s pretty much the team’s defacto intelligence officer.

Felix Munro (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=1565672#post1565672)

Alan Aiken (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=1277794&highlight=Aiken#post1277794)

General Jack O’Neil (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=1134286#post1134286)

Rose Bush and Daisy Thorn (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1463802&postcount=22159)

Shin and Kou (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=1509562&highlight=shin#post1509562)

Tony "Cipher" Estrada (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1527856&postcount=23373)

Harry "Solo Wing Pixy" Foulk (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=1565672#post1565672)

Albrecht Freiherr von Richthofen
(http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1539388&postcount=23648)
Izumi Sato (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1545446&postcount=23689)

Rebbecca Keller (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1572879&postcount=24031)

Groups:
75th Ranger Regiment (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1221166&postcount=13955)
(http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1221166&postcount=13955)
Machines:
Excalibur Class (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1158402&postcount=10717)

Timelines/History:

http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1538359&postcount=23615

Scroll down to the spoiler

Fics:
Current Project:
The Unsung War: Currently the focus of all writing efforts. Set post Strikers Epilogue VitaxOC pairing eventually.

Chapter 1.1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1486464&postcount=22571), 1.2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1486477&postcount=22572), 1.3 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1486481&postcount=22573)
Chapter 2.1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1547437&postcount=23704), 2.2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1547443&postcount=23705), 2.3 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1547444&postcount=23706)
(http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1547444&postcount=23706)Chapter 3.1, (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1618450&postcount=385)3.2, (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1633041&postcount=806)3.3, (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1953632&postcount=4018) 3.4 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2053680&postcount=4600)
Chapter: 4.1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2350072&postcount=6630), 4.2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2356396&postcount=6677), 4.3 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=2494960&postcount=7361)
Past Fics: These have little real continuity between most series although some minor references is going on, still most can be read as one shots and are written that way. Most are also fragmented and incomplete may or may not remain so depending on author laziness read 90% chance they're never finished.

Felix Interview Series:
Part 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1111331&postcount=7415)
Part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1113320&postcount=7588)

Pan-Usea War Series:
Part 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=1124165&highlight=content#post1124165)

The Obligatory RF6 Visit
Part 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1146274&postcount=9798)
Part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1142828&postcount=9547)
Fight Teaser: (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1146274&postcount=9798)
The Aftermath: (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1141170&postcount=9418)

TK’s Keroko Day (week:p) Specials (semi-canon):
Part 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1154620&postcount=10427)
Part 2 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1154657&postcount=10436)
Part 3 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1154690&postcount=10444)
Part 4 Pep Talk: (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=1155397#post1155397)
One shot (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=1155397#post1155397)
(Note: Somewhat disjointed without context read thread threw from post 10387 for best effect)

Normal Day at the SOPCC:
One shot (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1156048&postcount=10560)

Non-Canon:
These are old ideas that are no longer valid to my fanon though aspects of them might appear in altered form at later dates.
Unamed Post StrikerS Arc ([joke only he gets]NamelesS maybe? [/joke only he gets]):
Chapter 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1162499&postcount=10910)
Chapter 1.5 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=1177395&posted=1#post1177395)
Chapter 2.1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost.php?p=1204692&postcount=13185)

Usea 15 Years later:
Part 1 (http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?p=1139242&highlight=content#post1139242)

Tormenk

2008-05-19, 23:41

Rather than a system developed for general purpose, the BS was probably designed to fit Nanoha and RH, just as Riot Zamber is for Fate and BA. It doesn't seem to fit if Xiro, a melee mage, would be suitable to test the system which just makes beamspam more potent, something your character certainly doesn't do much of. If anything, it would be best to just let Nanoha test it herself to see what fits and what doesn't. Kind of like asking another person to try on a pair of pants to see whether it would fit on you. :p

If you do insist on Xiro being the field tester, he's probably going to get the short end of the stick. Considering the detrimental effect of the system and a prototype at that, he's bound for a couple hospital visits.

Comartemis

2008-05-19, 23:49

See, that's the kind of advice I like to get. Tell me what's wrong, give suggestions on how to fix it. Much better than "ZOMG this is stupid/unoriginal/haxxed-out-the-arse!"

Yeah, having Xiro be testing a beamspam machine doesn't make all that much sense now that I think more on it. What I wanted to do by having Nanoha and Xiro know each other through work was to create a kind of "ex-lover" situation here where all the emotion is on Xiro's side and Nanoha, for her part, is clueless. Xiro is essentially the outsider looking in at Fate and Nanoha, wishing he were a part of what they have, but knowing that it can never happen. And this isn't some lame-ass fic where he winds up in a harem with both of them, either. Xiro's gonna have to find someone else to get his romantic fix.

ghazghkull

2008-05-19, 23:54

Well here's a repost of Farukon's profile. Some editing here and there.

Name: Reddo “Glaive Knight” Farukon
Gender: Male
Date of Birth: April 21, MC0052
Age: 30
Height: 5’ 11”
Mage Rank: AA
Affiliation: TSAB
Rank: Ground Forces Captain

Personality: A bit brash, Captain Reddo Farukon is a skilled strategist, with a strong penchant for playing chess, a game that had been ported over from Earth some time ago.

An honourable man, he is known as the Glaive Knight, earned from the fact he is always seen with a glaive while in combat, and also due to his strong preference to close-combat, especially when the TSAB had began to train in Belka-style magic.

As a leader, his preferred method of leading those below him comes down to finding out the skills of those he leads, often by putting them into situations where their skills would come into play. From there, he observes how each member of his team handles the situations, which allows him to figure out potential leaders, supporters, or front liners. Although some find his methods odd, it has yet to fail him, especially with his renowned accomplishments with the teams he has led throughout his career.

Off duty, he’s often seen going around town, hanging with his friends. He a rather laid back man, who prefers to just sit back and watch his own ‘underlings,’ as he enjoys calling them, train themselves as they try to point out each others errors and help each other improve themselves. While he will step in if he needs to, he has a strong belief that the best instructors are often one’s peers, while instructors, like himself, simply give them the goal and guidelines to achieve such goals.

Magic type: Neo-Belka
Magic colour: Red

Assignment: Hammer 01, squad commander of Riot Force 6, under the command of Lt. Colonel Yagami Hayate

History

Born on Mid-Childa, Farukon was born in a military family, much like how Admiral Chrono Harlaown was. His parents now deceased; he had spent a portion of his late childhood with relatives, who took care of him in place of his parents. Their deaths had been the catalyst that solidified the idea of joining the TSAB Combat Division, where he had ended up becoming the top of his class, and left the Academy as a B-rank at age 19.

His career then on had hit a minor snag, as during a 4-year period, he had spent his career in an unfortunate limbo, drifting from assignment to assignment, due to the rise of Aces Takamachi Nanoha, Harlaown T Fate, and Yagami Hayate. The only thing of note during this period was his promotion to Corporal a year after his graduation, followed by his promotion to Sergeant 2 years later. This had left him in an awkward position to possibly be noticed by his higher ups for approximately a year. However, during a routine patrol, along with a side-project he had been working on, earned him the recognition he needed to advance on.

During such patrol, his unit had stumbled across a robbery that had been in progress, and had moved to engage. The ensuing fight had resulted in the unit commander incapacitated, with help still too far away to arrive on sight before civilian casualties ran out of control. Taking command, Farukon was able to organize the patrol unit, and mount an effective counter-attack and apprehended the robbers, and prevented collateral damage.

It was also during this mission Farukon had deployed his device, Gerhard, a project he had been working on for some time. Despite the device being nothing more than a simple storage device, it had provided him a means to effectively combat the robbers and disable them.

Although the unit had incurred injuries, his actions had drawn enough attention to warrant his promotion to Sergeant, which also by then had also permitted his chance to rank up again.

Following that mission, he eventually achieved his A-rank status, and immediately applied for officer training. Although he did not come out top of his class like in his academy days, he completed his training and gained a commission at the rank of 2nd Lieutenant. From there, his career entered a state of constant rise, as he moved from mission to mission, accomplishing them within a reasonable time frame. It was during this time there would be a mission that he would eventually lose his customer device Gerhard.

His exemplary career eventually landed him a command upon his promotion to 1st Lieutenant, nearly 3 years after his promotion to 2nd Lieutenant. It was also at this point he was issued his Armed Device Gerhard. Further information can be found in the Device section. Assigned a company, he began to build career, in hopes that eventually, he would be able to reach the rank of Captain, and rank up again, and then possibly attempt to be accepted into Enforcer training.

Appearance

http://img503.imageshack.us/img503/2597/reddofarukonjy2.th.jpg (http://img503.imageshack.us/my.php?image=reddofarukonjy2.jpg)

Barrier Jacket

Like most Barrier Jackets, the jacket Farukon wears relies more on flexibility and manoeuvrability, with descent defence. The general configuration is a simple black shirt underneath a short-sleeved, open jacket, cotton pants, with partial metal plats attached to the outside of his thighs, metal boots, black gloves attached to his shirt, and vambraces.

Device

Device Name: Gerhard Mk. 1
Weapon Type: Glaive
Length: 5’ (Pole/Chamber) 2.5’ (Blade)
System: Storage Device

Gerhard Mk. 1 was a Storage Device that Farukon had designed and called it Project Gerhard, some time back in his academy days, but didn’t have the parts, or the clearance to obtain the parts he needed, to build it. During his 4-year slump, he had attempted construction, and had reached up to a point it could be activated and take on a very basic form, which would be able to augment his powers at a very basic level.

After its initial activation, Farukon had continued to upgrade the device for some time, until it was destroyed in a mission.

However, the Research Division had received a copy of the original plans for Gerhard, which included Farukon’s original intention of giving his device, which had originally been planned to be an armed device, but due to the premature activation, and the fact he did not have clearance back then to obtain the parts needed, he had settled to use Gerhard as a Storage Device.

Once the Research Division had obtained his plans, they had immediately constructed Gerhard following Farukon’s promotion to 1st Lt, and given it to him days after his promotion.

Device Name: Gerhard Mk. 2
Weapon Type: Glaive
Length: 5’ (Pole/Chamber) 2.5’ (Blade)
System: Belka Cartridge System
Action: Straight blowback, closed bolt
Feed System: 5 round detachable box magazine

Built using some of the remains of the original Gerhard, Gerhard himself had a somewhat more matured personality compared to other newly activated devices, due to the fact that the original device itself had been imbued with magic for some time before its untimely destruction, giving it a rather unique bond with Farukon.

It was also due to this bond that Gerhard, on more than one occasion, was able to work in such tandem with Farukon that Gerhard was always prepared for any and all of Farukon’s actions and orders, such as erecting barriers, charging for an attack, or discharging a much needed cartridge for a boost in power.

Spells

Rückstoß durchbohren (Blowback Pierce): A mono direction attack, the purpose of this attack is to simply unleash a straight-line beam, intended to take out corridors filled with enemy contacts, or to break a section of an enemy formation. The attack is executed by means of projecting a magic circle, acting as a the focal point of release, followed by the user either manually charging the attack, or do so by means of discharging cartridges, until power level reaches desired needs. User would then immediately thrusts the weapon straight forward, into the circle, releasing a devastating beam, knocking down even the sturdiest of warriors off their feet.

Notes:
- The length and power of the attack is dependant of the amount of power inputted into the attack
- Can be used in one-on-one battle, but due to the cumbersome nature of the attack, it is not often recommended

Sturmwelle (Storm Wave):
User projects a magic circle in front of them and loads cartridge(s). The user then cuts along the circle. Depending on the angle of the cut, an energy wave is released in the same manner as the cut that was made.

Depending on the size of the circle, the arc length will change in accordance to the circle. However, the amount of cartridges loaded will also affect the power, distance covered, as well as the arc length.

Geistillusionen (Ghost Illusions): Operates exactly like the auto-barrier system, except that instead of creating a barrier, the spell creates a ghost image of the user, while teleporting him to a safe distance, relative to enemy positions.

Tormenk

2008-05-20, 00:57

LimitedEternal

2008-05-20, 01:13

Well Comar if the stuff you are posting are going to raised some eyebrows, it would be best to think hard and do a couple of self-edits before coming here. Haxxbusters are there to point out if something is off or not easily accepted otherwise, it's not like they are getting paid to haxxbust, nor do any of them seem to particularly enjoy doing so. :p So save them the trouble and think twice about your own work if you know it's going to cause them to headbang.

Ironically, if I need advice on whether something might be haxx, I ask...one of the haxxbusters. :3

Better to run it by them before you set it in stone, than to post it and have them start shooting. Hell, my favorite piece of advice, for anyone, is to run a preliminary of any idea past someone else first. That second opinion can make all the difference in the world.

Keroko

2008-05-20, 03:34

I've been sort of absent, I know, but I recently managed to pick up a copy of Grandia.

Imagine me falling out of my bed in surprise when I saw my name come across the screen not even a few minutes into play. :eek:

Of course, that just begs for an OC-fication. :3

Rebuild of Turmoil

-snip-

While this is very similar to the most recent version posted, I've made a few things more overt and concrete in this version, and taken steps to ameliorate certain otherwise overpowered aspects.

one obvious change is that David is now an explicit Rare Ability user, with a special skill linked into his background called Savant. In practical terms, this reflects the fact that David has been using magic unconsciously and near constantly for a long time without realising, until it is pretty much reflexive for him. Because of this, David's casting times are exceptionally fast; as mentioned, often the spell is fully cast before he's even thought of it fully. Also because of this, David's spells are much less precise than a normal mage's, and can vary wildly dependent on his subconscious mental state.

Because he's not only an unclassified mage, but also a Rare Ability user, it makes his acceptance by and rise through the Bureau that much more likely, and so sets the scene for him to be included in major story arcs (hint hint), without seeming out of place next to the much more (directly) powerful main characters.

Another obvious change (or at least one that sets the Haxbuster alarm bells ringing) is the fact that he now has THREE, yes count 'em THREE Devices: Two heavily altered Boost Devices and His armed device.
This obviously requires Justification. The story behind them is this:

The Boost Devices serve to manage and regulate specific areas of David's unpredictable Savant powered spells. Each is keyed to a specific area, and prevents spells of that type getting out of hand due to subconscious mental issues or vagaries of unconscious spell forming. This is explained in their own profile entries. Basically, they are used as a form of 'Smart' limiter that keeps things under control, but still allows his full power to be used when necessary. The armed Device, then simply becomes the primary offensive implement.

The other part of it is that I wanted to produce a Black and a white device to add to the Grey one, and so emphasize the dichotomy of David's role: as a Battlefield medic, He is expected to heal, but also to kill if needed, and so he is a kind of paradox. Hence we have the two coloured aspects, which reflect these two roles, and then the grey which reflects his acceptance of such dichotomy.

I think I'm fairly happy with this as it stands...it's got some power behind it, but not too much as to upset the applecart, or dethrone aces and major frontliners, but at the same time, he's there to fight with all he's got, and to pick up the pieces afterward if need be...

He may not be Awesome, but he's got your Back...

Or should that be (and for the original owner of this phrase too, for those that recognize it...)

That: He IS awesome BECAUSE he's got your back?

Mahou Shounen Medical David, Hajimarimas

I like what you did with it. The Savant abillity has H4XX potentional, but that is mostly negated by his B-rank. :nod:

Shortly after being placed in the SAFA, Xiro was partnered with Takamachi Nanoha. While his “partner in crime” was more interested in training new recruits than in testing new weaponry, Xiro took the opposite route, becoming a test pilot for a wide array of new advancements, including the prototype of the Blaster System, which he recommended to Nanoha under the condition that she exercise extreme caution in its’ usage.

Hmm, I'm agreeing with the others here, I have no problems with him being in the SAFA, but it doesn't make much sense for him to have tested the Blaster System, much less adviced Nanoha to have used it (on another note, Nanoha too participated in the testing of new weaponry, there is nothing to indicate she prefered training above her other duties).

It was during this brief time, however, that Xiro also began to develop strong feelings for his coworker. Attracted to Nanoha by her eternally-upbeat attitude and positive outlook on life (among many many other reasons), Xiro managed to ask Nanoha out on several “friendly outings” together, which Nanoha accepted under the belief that she was merely spending time with a friend. It wasn’t until several weeks into their one-sided relationship that Xiro happened to catch Nanoha and Fate in the middle of a private moment, shattering any illusions he’d had that Nanoha returned his feelings.

*blink* Uhm... what? Oh, wait, this is another character that is for private use, isn't it? Because... you know... Nanoha and Fate aren't like that canonically.

This isn't even HAXX. Your execution on this particular trait of Xiro is nothing but sheer stupidity.

How does one jump from the Ground Forces AKA the ARMY to the AIR FORCE?! Explain to me, how exactly does one, who has been trained in the art of war meant for the Ground, suddenly jump into training for something meant for the Air Force?!

Because that's how the TSAB works, Ghaz.

http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y191/Liinna/argument%20stuff/11.jpg

Unless you're A-ranked or above, you can't start flight training, which means that 90% of the Air Force mages will start in the Ground Force. Even Teana is in the Ground Force with the idea of rising to the Air Force once she has enough experience. Xiro's bio is nothing out of the ordinary in that regard.

The entry I read for the SAFA says that they "test new weapon systems and tactics". To my way of thinking, the Blaster System is something Nanoha is essentially putting through a rather rigorous field test.

While you could look at it that way, doesn't that also mean that it is Nanoha, not Xiro, that participated in its testing?

XenahortCharybdis

2008-05-20, 07:35

Worry not ghaz, I'm putting the finishing touches on a new character as we speak. Haxxbusters, prepare for combat!

You must be crazy today, my boy...VERY crazy.

*cracks another bullet down the Black King*

*cracks his knuckles*

I'm ready for you.

Shortly after being placed in the SAFA, Xiro was partnered with Takamachi Nanoha. While his “partner in crime” was more interested in training new recruits than in testing new weaponry, Xiro took the opposite route, becoming a test pilot for a wide array of new advancements, including the prototype of the Blaster System, which he recommended to Nanoha under the condition that she exercise extreme caution in its’ usage.

It was during this brief time, however, that Xiro also began to develop strong feelings for his coworker. Attracted to Nanoha by her eternally-upbeat attitude and positive outlook on life (among many many other reasons), Xiro managed to ask Nanoha out on several “friendly outings” together, which Nanoha accepted under the belief that she was merely spending time with a friend. It wasn’t until several weeks into their one-sided relationship that Xiro happened to catch Nanoha and Fate in the middle of a private moment, shattering any illusions he’d had that Nanoha returned his feelings.

Hmmm...you ship NanoFate too...that makes you all the more my enemy.

*prepares to shoot Comart...*

Ah, what am I thinking? This is a h4xxbusting rifle, not a shipping-war rifle. You got lucky, I forgot to bring the other one today :p

And Shadow attacks? Too much Hollow/Ataraxia for me already, but I'll let that pass me a bit. Just a bit.

Xiro’s powerset revolves largely around his wind-elemental spells and his incredible speed. Xiro’s fighting style is as freeform and flexible as the wind itself. He can strike and fade like a sudden breeze, or unleash his rage with the explosive power of a hurricane. In battle he is extremely agile and skilled with his spear, Fragrach, and uses his wind-element spells to boost his speed and agility further than almost any mage in the entire bureau.

...God, Lancer, Lancer, Lancer. I said I'd let it pass, though, and so I will. Thank GOD lightning is faster than wind, though :D

Device: Fragrach
Type: Storage
Magical Color: Scarlet
A.I. Characteristics: Fragrach is based on the form of a heavily-modified Storage device, and as such it contains a very limited A.I. possessing only the most basic functions. Unlike other Storage-type devices, however, Fragrach possesses multiple forms, a result of modifications Xiro made to the device’s frame and internal workings during his time as a member of the SAFA.

Storage Form: A small red arrowhead necklace.

Basic Form: A simple red spear with a bladed head on one end and a blunted tip on the other. The blade allows Xiro to use Fragrach as a cutting weapon as much as a piercing one.

Advanced Form: Xiro breaks Fragrach into two halves, which regenerate and reform into a pair of spears identical to Fragrach’s basic form.

Full Drive Form: Each of Fragrach’s two halves breaks into three parts which regenerate into a grand total of six lances. These lances differ greatly from Fragrach’s basic form, having a trio of blades arranged in a triangular pattern on one end and a bladed spearhead which vaguely resembles a dragon’s head on the other. Xiro typically holds only one or two of these lances at once and holds the others in a firm telekinetic grip, though he will sometimes control all six with his telekinesis at the same time.

@Ghaz: You needn't get frustrated. Fragarach DOES indeed control the wind *strikes the Celtic Wind off his list of usable weaponry*

But I MUST admit to you, the Fate/Hollow-Ataraxia refs are getting to me, staved off by my earlier promise.

[SPOILER="Miscellanious Spells"]Telekinesis: The basis of many of Xiro’s abilities and the most fundamental part of his arsenal. Xiro’s telekinesis is a product of his wind affinity, which is at heart the manipulation of kinetic energy. Xiro possesses an extremely high degree of power and control with his telekinesis, and uses this ability to manipulate his lances, launch attacks, turn the environment into an arsenal of weapons, and turn off the alarm clock when he’s too lazy to get out of bed, among many other uses. While Xiro is able to use this ability on people as well as objects, any form of magical protection (such as a barrier jacket) is sufficient to disrupt his control and prevent him from flinging his enemies around like ragdolls.

I wonder what the HELL is the use of his Telekinesis, then, if he can't throw people around. If he has such a high degree of power, heck wonders why if a shockwave can blow a mage, BJ and all, backwards, a focused telekinetic wave cannot do the same. Misguided attempt to self-h4xxbust, I call this.

You just made a rather straightforward skill that I had no problem with (save the power level) a ridiculously paradoxical attack.

Slipstream: One of the secrets to Xiro’s speed. Slipstream is a wind-element speed boost spell that creates a bubble of air around Xiro. This bubble diverts the air in front of him away from Xiro while he is in flight, effectively reducing his drag to zero and allowing him to fly at incredibly high speeds.

Good Lord, Comart, where are your laws of aerodynamics? Do a lil' science homework before you tell me (or anyone else) that a bulbous shape reduces drag, thank you very much. I've only taken 2 years of Physics, but I do know that there is no army on earth or out of it that would commission a missile like that.

Even Magneto's "Magnetic Bubble" was more believable :rolleyes:

Zero Shift: Xiro’s Flash Move equvilant. Identical in most respects to other forms of extreme-speed spells, Zero Shift has the additional effect of obscuring Xiro’s form while in movement due to the large amounts of air this spell displaces while in use.

You might as well say that this spell leaves aftershadows, that would make a lot more sense, my friend, than an aerial distortion clinging to its source :p

Struggle Bind: Xiro’s only binding spell, identical to Yuuno’s and Chrono’s spells of the same name. Xiro hasn’t completely mastered this spell, and must maintain his focus on the target to prevent the bind from unravelling.

Doesn't everybody have to do that? You've at least gotta tell me that he has trouble with it, or I won't believe this at all.

Sky Waltz: A basic platform spell Xiro used in his days in the GFA. Simple to the point where Xiro can conjure dozens with a thought, Xiro primarily uses these to make sudden changes in direction while in flight. For a slightly increased mana cost, the spells can be imbued with a springboard effect, causing anything that hits them to bounce off on a wild trajectory. Chains of these spells can be set up to create a pinball effect, as an enemy is bounced from one platform to the next without the chance to regain their bearings.

Oh, Aurion! Someone loves your skill so much he copped it.

Knight’s Garb: Much like the Wolkenritter, Xiro prefers to rely on his speed more than his armor, and dresses lightly for battle so as to not interfere with his movements. His knight’s garb consists of a simple blue bodysuit adorned with steel embroidery along the arms, legs, and torso, with a pair of large metal shoulder pauldrons being the most solid piece of armor in his entire ensemble.

:eyebrow:Wait-a-minute. Isn't the Knight's Garb unique to the Wolkies?!:eyebrow:

It was bleedin' commissioned by their Meister! A retouch job, actually, but heck that, at least Hayate has very good fashion sense, as can be especially seen in Vita and Shamal's dresses :D

Thunder Shock: A wind-element spell similar to Vita’s Eisengeheul, this spell creates a ball of highly-pressurized air which Xiro can detonate on command, effectively acting as a magical flashbang grenade. The spell is named for the sound the spell makes on detonation, that of a crack of thunder. Fragrach is programmed to recognize the casting of this spell and redirect extra power to Xiro’s knight armor, allowing him to detonate this spell at short range and not suffer any ill effects.

Xiro: Pika-Pikaaaaaaaa-

-CHUUUUU!!!!!!!!!

:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

The auto-reinforce is quite stupid really. Even Blade and Van Helsing knew to dodge their own phosphorus grenades, for heaven's sake. Any person throwing a flashbang would get out of the way pronto, and secondly, other than being really loud, blinding and altogether seriously irritating, there's not much else a flashbang can do to damage you.

Tempest Blade: Xiro uses Fragrach as the base of a powerful anti-magic shield while whirling the spear in front of him to deflect physical attacks.

Sigh...blatant Lancer rip.

Invisible Air: One of Xiro’s most commonly-used spells, this AA-ranked spell involves conjuring a lance of wind and hurling it like a javelin. Because it is made of air, it is impossible to see (save for a slightly visible disturbance in the air) and can only be dodged by judging the angle of Xiro’s throw. Possesses decent penetration power, but can be blocked by most autoguard spells. The lance can also be used as an improvised melee weapon if Xiro is disarmed.

Saber/Lancer rip...

Decent penetration power = can break ANY auto-guard spell. Auto-guards are known to be some of the more pathetic forms of defense in canon, and an AA rank direct attack spell should be more than sufficient to shatter it. Like I said, self-bust if you want, just don't make things sound outright ridiculous.

Storm Sickle: A magic-enhanced attack spell classified as AAA-rank, this spell imbues Fragrach with large amounts of magical energy as the spear is whirled over Xiro’s head. The spear is then released as a thrown projectile, transforming into a deadly six-foot long buzzsaw which is guided by Xiro’s telekinesis.

WTFreaking hell?! :twitch::twitch::twitch:

Since when was a buzzsaw a SICKLE?! FYI, a sickle is something you swing, and kill a person with because of its hooking ability that comes with its shape and the form of swing. It isn't something that just grinds the hell out of the opponent from the front...

Typhoon Sickle: The most powerful offensive spell in Xiro’s arsenal at present time, Typhoon Sickle is an upgraded version of Storm Sickle used with Fragrach in its’ Full Drive form. The enhanced attack status is applied to all six of Xiro’s lances, which are launched and guided with his telekinesis as per Storm Sickle.

I can imagine that this would make any of my OCs laugh, not because it was weak, but because it looks so ridiculous. And you say his Telekinesis is so weak that it is able to control six such huge roils of energy...but not penetrate a autoguard or a BJ.

I can see them laughing in my head now, those voices that drive me insane :rolleyes:

Alright, here's the latest headbanger for the haxxbusters to have fun with. If anybody looks at this and doesn't see a AAA-rank for whatever reason, try to keep in mind that Xiro (pronounced "Zero", just so we're clear) is supposed to have gained his rank through an absurd level of skill in melee, not through beamspam and overwhelming power.

I don't see the point of the challenge. If anything, it isn't a challenge to US. We can accept that just fine, even though your spell list tells me that his style is quite unlike what you say.

If anything, our OCs will take your challenge. They'll beat him down, as much as we'll beat you down the next time you send us a real challenge, and not some random non-threatening side-note like this :D:D:D:D:D

This isn't even HAXX. Your execution on this particular trait of Xiro is nothing but sheer stupidity.

How does one jump from the Ground Forces AKA the ARMY to the AIR FORCE?! Explain to me, how exactly does one, who has been trained in the art of war meant for the Ground, suddenly jump into training for something meant for the Air Force?!

Someone's already said something, so I'll hold my peace.

Okay that's just breaking canon into your own storyline.

The Blaster System, was Nanoha's own design! The Blaster System is part of Raising Heart, just as Excellion, Aggressor, and Exceed are part of the system that is known as Raising Heart.

Another thing, it's Nanoha's JOB to test every single new weapons system that comes through her department.

For Truth. Quoted for Truth. Although to have Xiro work with her isn't too bad, ya know. That poor heartbroken boy.

Which is why you realize that NOBODY in the Air Forces uses stuff that Nanoha designs, it's frickin' suicidal, and only someone like her would try it :D

:eek::eek:

OSHI-

*is blown away by STARLIGHT BUREKA*

FRAGRACH?! HAVE YOU ACTUALLY SEEN Fate/Hallow Atraxia?!!!! Fragrach is a bloody blade! Not some three piece Lance!

Relax, old fruit. It isn't so bad, and I'm grateful that this is one thing about his OC that isn't a blatant cop-off.

Very unoriginal.

I'm not going to even look at the other stuff, because I'm getting a bloody headache out of this.

This is NOT an Original Character. This is an amalgamation of various Fate/stay night references, along with pointless add-ons, and serious breach of canon.

You need to seriously stop taking major references, and make up your own concepts. All of my characters, all of Keroko's characters, heck almost everyone's characters are original. Their physical appearances may be based off of other material, but none of them uses the traits that those characters are known for.

They are unique.

They are different from the character that their appearances were based from.

They are ORIGINAL.

There is a second meaning to OC besides Outer Cadia: ORIGINAL CHARACTER

A headache, already?

Your H4xx-bust-Fu is too weak, Ghaz my good fella.

Just kidding, you're probably eons ahead of me, but you really need to hold your cool (at least in a tangible way aka on the Forum)

Honestly, Comartermis, while I used to be irritated easily by major refs, I've slowly become more used to it, and by now porting is perfectly fine by me since I can accept that it's a fact of life by now. However, this, just renaming a character and then spamming refs, without an attempt to disguise the refs, is a bit too much for my palate still.

And I will confess that Liingo is right in that most if not all concepts have already been tried, I'm one of those idealists that believes that there's still something out there that we still dare not try, and that there are more walls beyond the fourth. Also, even if that ideal fails, I'm willing to accept the reality, that many times we must use combinations.

So a piece of advice.

If you wanna port, then say you wanna port. SaintX says it, Shou says it, and I don't mind, since I already know, and I don't really care.

Don't try to hide porting under OCing.

See, that's the kind of advice I like to get. Tell me what's wrong, give suggestions on how to fix it. Much better than "ZOMG this is stupid/unoriginal/haxxed-out-the-arse!"

Right, right, we have different styles of busting. Honestly, though, some of these problems are not with h4xx but with systemic contradiction in the effects of spells and such, which you should have considered before posting Xiro. Seriously.

Yeah, having Xiro be testing a beamspam machine doesn't make all that much sense now that I think more on it. What I wanted to do by having Nanoha and Xiro know each other through work was to create a kind of "ex-lover" situation here where all the emotion is on Xiro's side and Nanoha, for her part, is clueless. Xiro is essentially the outsider looking in at Fate and Nanoha, wishing he were a part of what they have, but knowing that it can never happen. And this isn't some lame-ass fic where he winds up in a harem with both of them, either. Xiro's gonna have to find someone else to get his romantic fix.

It wasn't supposed to be a bad idea...it's just that you got some of your facts wrong. If only you hadn't said that proviso about Nanoha first, I don't think I would have complained at all...

Romantic Fix Indeed. You little materialistic unromantic pompous arrogant-

*is driven insane by voices in his head giving him random thesaurus words to speak*

:eyespin::eyespin::eyespin:

Well Comar if the stuff you are posting are going to raised some eyebrows, it would be best to think hard and do a couple of self-edits before coming here. Haxxbusters are there to point out if something is off or not easily accepted otherwise, it's not like they are getting paid to haxxbust, nor do any of them seem to particularly enjoy doing so. :p So save them the trouble and think twice about your own work if you know it's going to cause them to headbang.

Hey, we h4xxbust you for FREE! In society, h4xx-busting comes in the form of a suspension or a sack, man, we're really kind already, now aren't we? :D

And like I said, we DO give you diaper money to solve your problems later :)

Ironically, if I need advice on whether something might be haxx, I ask...one of the haxxbusters. :3

Better to run it by them before you set it in stone, than to post it and have them start shooting. Hell, my favorite piece of advice, for anyone, is to run a preliminary of any idea past someone else first. That second opinion can make all the difference in the world.

Now THAT is the model for safe OCing. I must admit I myself take a lot of risks in never running anything past people first...but it hasn't caused me major problems yet (except with PF, although you're one to talk about that, Phoenix :p)

While you could look at it that way, doesn't that also mean that it is Nanoha, not Xiro, that participated in its testing?

Not...entirely, I would think. Every system has not only ONE field test. With something as scary as that, it would need a lot of different tests, to be honest. If Xiro did one of the intermediate stages, and Nanoha brought it to its final fruition with her insane-ZOMG-beamspam field tests, I wouldn't complain at all.

Wild Goose

2008-05-20, 08:02

XenahortCharybdis

2008-05-20, 08:12

Regarding haxxbusting: I'm available on IRC at various times. Keep popping in there regularly and I'll be around to give a hand.

I'm tempted to go Abare but I'm watching Ozma's awesoem VF-25S and just can't stop giggling with glee at how that thing moves. And the MISSILE BUKAKKE. GLORIOUS MISSILE BUKAKKE.

AND FUCK YES KONIG MONSTER FOR THE ARTILLERY WIN.

Hello, Abare-tan! *waves*

Bukkake?! Missile bukkake? I am sort of regretting my choice to resist the urge of watching Macross in favor of writing my Chapter by now...DAMN YOU!!!!

:frustrated::mad::mad::frustrated:

Keroko

2008-05-20, 08:35

:eyebrow:Wait-a-minute. Isn't the Knight's Garb unique to the Wolkies?!:eyebrow:

It was bleedin' commissioned by their Meister! A retouch job, actually, but heck that, at least Hayate has very good fashion sense, as can be especially seen in Vita and Shamal's dresses :D

It's never mention that Knight's Garb is 'exclusive' to the Wolkies, just that the Wolkies are wearing it.

For Truth. Quoted for Truth. Although to have Xiro work with her isn't too bad, ya know. That poor heartbroken boy.

Which is why you realize that NOBODY in the Air Forces uses stuff that Nanoha designs, it's frickin' suicidal, and only someone like her would try it :D

Keroko-chan: Haa- Haaa-chu!

Keroko-kun: Gezondheid.

Keroko-chan: *sniff* Thanks. Is someone talking about me?

Keroko-kun: *watches Xena fly away* Nope, no-one at all.

Not...entirely, I would think. Every system has not only ONE field test. With something as scary as that, it would need a lot of different tests, to be honest. If Xiro did one of the intermediate stages, and Nanoha brought it to its final fruition with her insane-ZOMG-beamspam field tests, I wouldn't complain at all.

Well, my main issue with this is that it is hinted that Nanoha tested the thing herself prior to the Cradle incident. Nanoha knew the risks and what she could and could not handle, which suggests she handled it. Knowing her being in the SAFA, the logical conclusion is that she was part of the team that designed it, or at least ingrained in the process (which becomes even more plausible knowing that the system was designed for Raising Heart specifically, I imagine Nanoha would want to be as closely involved with this as possible).

Of course, that doesn't exclude Xiro working on the Blaster system, but not to the point where he worked on the prototype and recommended it to her (why on earth would they go to a Belkan mage to test a prototype Mid weapon intended for a Mid SAFA mage? I'd think they'd go straight to the person the thing is meant for). I would think that he would have worked on it along side her.

Wild Goose

2008-05-20, 08:43

He could have been a chase pilot, observing Nanoha as she puts the Blaster System through its paces.

Keroko

2008-05-20, 08:46

*nods* Or her oponent to see how the Blaster Sytem handled in melee combat, those two sound far more likely then testing it before Nanoha even knew of its existence.

XenahortCharybdis

2008-05-20, 08:49

It's never mention that Knight's Garb is 'exclusive' to the Wolkies, just that the Wolkies are wearing it.

Duly noted. Although it was mostly "Armor", maybe that's what got me.

Keroko-chan: Haa- Haaa-chu!

Keroko-kun: Gezondheid.

Keroko-chan: *sniff* Thanks. Is someone talking about me?

Keroko-kun: *watches Xena fly away* Nope, no-one at all.

:heh::heh::heh:

Well, my main issue with this is that it is hinted that Nanoha tested the thing herself prior to the Cradle incident. Nanoha knew the risks and what she could and could not handle, which suggests she handled it. Knowing her being in the SAFA, the logical conclusion is that she was part of the team that designed it, or at least ingrained in the process (which becomes even more plausible knowing that the system was designed for Raising Heart specifically, I imagine Nanoha would want to be as closely involved with this as possible).

Of course, that doesn't exclude Xiro working on the Blaster system, but not to the point where he worked on the prototype and recommended it to her. I would think that he would have worked on it along side her.

Ah. I see. Thanks for elaborating where I couldn't (I couldn't remember all this stuff off the top of my head :D)

Comartemis

2008-05-20, 08:51

Better to run it by them before you set it in stone, than to post it and have them start shooting. Hell, my favorite piece of advice, for anyone, is to run a preliminary of any idea past someone else first. That second opinion can make all the difference in the world.
That's what I've been trying to do on IRC these days. Steel Mage? Got it approved as a rare skill. Ice + Water combo? Got it approved. Nerfing Vivio's Saint's Armor? Asked for ideas and I got plenty of them.

*blink* Uhm... what? Oh, wait, this is another character that is for private use, isn't it? Because... you know... Nanoha and Fate aren't like that canonically.
If we were to go strictly by canon around here, half the stuff on this board wouldn't exist. And NxF is as good as canon so far as I care. :rolleyes:

Because that's how the TSAB works, Ghaz.
*Evil smirk*

Thought so.

And Shadow attacks? Too much Hollow/Ataraxia for me already, but I'll let that pass me a bit. Just a bit.
....not Hollow/Atraxia.... Kingdom Hearts. Shadows = Nanohaverse Heartless.

Details will be forthcoming.

But I MUST admit to you, the Fate/Hollow-Ataraxia refs are getting to me, staved off by my earlier promise.
Hey, I looked for mythic European spears and all I could find was Gae Bolg (too obvious, he's a enough of a Lancer knock-off as it is) or Gungnir, which something like three other people have already used.

I wonder what the HELL is the use of his Telekinesis, then, if he can't throw people around.
The problem with throwing people around is that if you can use telekinesis freely on human beings, what's stopping you from getting their heart in a TK grip and crushing it into pulp?

*Uses Force Choke on Xena*

See my point? TK has the potential to be extremely haxxed if done wrong, so I limited it to non-magically protected objects and people.

Good Lord, Comart, where are your laws of aerodynamics? Do a lil' science homework before you tell me (or anyone else) that a bulbous shape reduces drag, thank you very much.
The point isn't the shape of the spell, it's the magic involved. The bubble is essentially diverting all the air around Xiro before it makes contact with him and creates drag.

Doesn't everybody have to do that?
I don't recall Chrono having to maintain his focus on the Lieze twins in A's; he just cast it and BAM! Instant Shibari. Xiro on the other hand has to maintain a constant focus to keep his target immobilized, and by "constant focus" I mean "has to stand still with hand outstretched, rune still formed, and no other spells being cast".

Oh, Aurion! Someone loves your skill so much he copped it.
:eyebrow: Oi, Sky Waltz came from Zero way back when, not from someone else's OC!

Wait-a-minute. Isn't the Knight's Garb unique to the Wolkies?!
Their designs, yes, but the general concept of sacrificing armor for speed? I doubt it.

Xiro: Pika-Pikaaaaaaaa-

-CHUUUUU!!!!!!!!!
I knew someone was going to spot that, just knew it. :heh:

WTFreaking hell?!

Since when was a buzzsaw a SICKLE?!
In my defense I was running out of cool wind-based names to give to my spells. :uhoh:

And you say his Telekinesis is so weak that it is able to control six such huge roils of energy...but not penetrate a autoguard or a BJ.
Not weak, it's just that magical defenses screw up his control and make it really hard to use TK on them directly.

Xena, were you present for the dehaxxing of Iris's reality marble, Winter Wasteland? I specifically limited that spell to ensure that she couldn't form her ice attacks inside and/or through her enemy, thus negating the possibility of instant unavoidable kills. Same logic applies here.

If you wanna port, then say you wanna port. SaintX says it, Shou says it, and I don't mind, since I already know, and I don't really care.

Don't try to hide porting under OCing.
Alright, if Xiro really rubs everyone the wrong way so much I'll take him back to the drawing board and turn him into a swordsman or something.

Wild Goose

2008-05-20, 09:11

Right now? I just don't care, plain and simple.

Hmmm. I suppose I better finish the final mission of OG2.

Keroko

2008-05-20, 09:19

If we were to go strictly by canon around here, half the stuff on this board wouldn't exist. And NxF is as good as canon so far as I care. :rolleyes:

Not to start a ship war or anything, but the latest official relationship charts labeles them -and I quote- "Best Friends" with the line connecting to Hayate too.

Of course, that shouldn't affect your own fics, but since the OC-thread tries to stay as true to canon as we can, if you want to use Xiro here then that little point should really change if we don't want to contradict one another.

....not Hollow/Atraxia.... Kingdom Hearts. Shadows = Nanohaverse Heartless.

Details will be forthcoming.

.... Kingdom Hearts. *shudders*

Hey, I looked for mythic European spears and all I could find was Gae Bolg (too obvious, he's a enough of a Lancer knock-off as it is) or Gungnir, which something like three other people have already used.

Try Luin, the Spear of Lugh. One of the four treasures of Ireland, fabled for being insanely hot and having the properties elemental attacks.

Or the Spear of Assal, when thrown in battle, uttering the word 'Ibal' would always make it hit its target, and it returned to the thrower on uttering the word 'Athibar'.

The problem with throwing people around is that if you can use telekinesis freely on human beings, what's stopping you from getting their heart in a TK grip and crushing it into pulp?

That's easy, simply saying 'Telekinetics only affect the outside of what you're grabbing' will do. Its like grabbing a person with your hands, you can't grab their hearts directly.

The point isn't the shape of the spell, it's the magic involved. The bubble is essentially diverting all the air around Xiro before it makes contact with him and creates drag.

... Isn't that what mages always do when flying? :heh:

http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y191/Liinna/Nanoha/th_grab17734.png (http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y191/Liinna/Nanoha/grab17734.png)

I don't recall Chrono having to maintain his focus on the Lieze twins in A's; he just cast it and BAM! Instant Shibari. Xiro on the other hand has to maintain a constant focus to keep his target immobilized, and by "constant focus" I mean "has to stand still with hand outstretched, rune still formed, and no other spells being cast".

Hmm, well a certain amount of concentration has to be maintained while casting the spell, but not of the level you described.

Alright, if Xiro really rubs everyone the wrong way so much I'll take him back to the drawing board and turn him into a swordsman or something.

That's not needed on my account, I merely want to balance some inacuracies. I don't care if charactes are ported over and piled with references, as long as they're well done. The others who have a problem with it most likely just want a 'Yes, I ported Lancer into Nanohaverse'.

Comartemis

2008-05-20, 09:36

Not to start a ship war or anything, but the latest official relationship charts labeles them -and I quote- "Best Friends" with the line connecting to Hayate too.
The power of subtext cannot be denied by a mere relationship chart! :p

... Isn't that what mages always do when flying?
*Notes pic*

...alas, I am defeated. :sad: Looks like Xiro's no better than any other Air Mage all of a sudden. Oh well, got another idea I want to run by you guys in a while anyways, this one involving my long-delayed Steel Mage concept. I'll be on IRC in an hour or so to play around with this concept as per LE's advice.

Keroko

2008-05-20, 09:43

The power of subtext cannot be denied by a mere relationship chart! :p

Sugestive scenes are subject to interpretation. A relationship chart is not. Despair, ye NanoFaters, for Yuuno is still in the race! :3

Besides, you want subtext? I'll give you subtext! (http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y191/Liinna/grab13945.png) :p

*Notes pic*

...alas, I am defeated. :sad: Looks like Xiro's no better than any other Air Mage all of a sudden. Oh well, got another idea I want to run by you guys in a while anyways, this one involving my long-delayed Steel Mage concept. I'll be on IRC in an hour or so to play around with this concept as per LE's advice.

Bleh, just post the idea here, I don't do IRC.

Tormenk

2008-05-20, 09:58

The power of subtext cannot be denied by a mere relationship chart! :p

*Notes pic*

...alas, I am defeated. :sad: Looks like Xiro's no better than any other Air Mage all of a sudden. Oh well, got another idea I want to run by you guys in a while anyways, this one involving my long-delayed Steel Mage concept. I'll be on IRC in an hour or so to play around with this concept as per LE's advice.

Got a hundred different things to do so this will be short.

Nothing's wrong with a so-called normal mage, unless you really think it's a great fault for being normal. Not the best person to say this but power alone doesn't make a good character.

Frankly speaking, rather than the character rubbing people the wrong way it's how you have a penchant for creating powerful characters right off the bat and not being really balanced out that's rubbing people the wrong way.

Speaking for myself, I don't really have issues with powerful or h4xx chars. I'm not one to h4xxbust much or point out things correctly so I mostly abstain from such and leave it until the actual story which the character themselves show up and interact to make a judgment. Which only happens when something is written after all that is said and done. Sadly a common failing which I'm guilty of too. :heh:

And w/e to the almighty power of subtext. :rolleyes:

Keroko

2008-05-20, 10:05

XenahortCharybdis

2008-05-20, 10:33

Keroko

2008-05-20, 10:46

Comartemis

2008-05-20, 10:55

Sheba

2008-05-20, 11:04

Try Luin, the Spear of Lugh. One of the four treasures of Ireland, fabled for being insanely hot and having the properties elemental attacks.

Or the Spear of Assal, when thrown in battle, uttering the word 'Ibal' would always make it hit its target, and it returned to the thrower on uttering the word 'Athibar'.

I read it! In Slaine (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sl%C3%A1ine_%28comics%29) comic books!

http://img357.imageshack.us/img357/9536/resized20slaine20helmetcq1.th.jpg (http://img357.imageshack.us/my.php?image=resized20slaine20helmetcq1.jpg)

Altho his signature weapon is his axe.

XenahortCharybdis

2008-05-20, 11:05

h4xxbuster was a term first given to Aaron, actually, and it was given to him because he was able to spot overpowered bits in a profile, point them out and help people fix them, all the while remaining polite while doing so.

h4xxbusters only became blunt later on, and the term was garbled since then. True h4xxbusters don't yell about h4xx. They fix them.

*Cadian History Trivia Absorbed for Later Use*

Alright. I'll go old skool then, in honor of Spirly-tan (you know, @@ron008R :D)

It's back to the normal me for me :D

PhoenixFlare

2008-05-20, 11:07

I think it has less to do with Cort's characters (really, most characters that come here go through a balancing routine) but more that the H4XXbusters have become.... really blunt. It's no longer a gentle 'you should take a better look at this' but more a 'H4XX! Change!' command.

Quite true, but seeing as he has so far given enough headaches to a number of person, I guess they're quick to judge the character by the merit of the author and not by the character itself, hence the bluntness. Well, you can say that he does give me headaches at first, but I think he's already improving a lot. :)

h4xxbusters only became blunt later on, and the term was garbled since then. True h4xxbusters don't yell about h4xx. They fix them.

Quoted for truth! :D

Hey, I looked for mythic European spears and all I could find was Gae Bolg (too obvious, he's a enough of a Lancer knock-off as it is) or Gungnir, which something like three other people have already used.

Here you go.

Amenonuhoko (heavenly spear), the spear used by the Shinto deities Izanagi and Izanami to create the world (Japanese mythology)
The Gae Bolg, the spear of Cuchulainn, given to him by Aife, the sister of Scathach, and made from the bone of a sea-monster (Celtic mythology).
Gungnir, Odin's magic spear created by the dwarf Dvalin. It would never miss its aim and it could not be stopped in mid-throw (Norse mythology)
Ogma's Whip - the spear of Ogma (the Celtic sun god) is used to "guide the passage of the invisible sun"
The Pelian Spear, Achilles' great mythical spear. Created by Hephaestus and given to Peleus at his wedding with Thetis (Greek mythology)
The Spear Luin (also Spear of Fire or Spear of Destiny), forged by the Smith of Falias for Lugh to use in his fight against Balor (Celtic mythology)
The Spear of Destiny (also Spear of Longinus or the Holy Lance), the spear said to have pierced the side of Jesus at the crucifixion
Rhongomiant, which was the spear of King Arthur.
Spears of the Valkyrie "Various" The weapons of the infamous Valkyries, these weapons are described as having flaming barbs.
Kongō, A trident-shaped staff which emits a bright light in the darkness. It gives a man wisdom and insight. The staff belonged originally to the Japanese mountain-god Koya-no-Myoin. It is the equivalent of the Sanskrit vajra, the lightning-jewel of the mountain-god Indra. There the staff represents the three flames of the sacrificial fire, part of the image of the vajra wheel.
Poseidon's Trident, used to create horses and some water sources in Greece. It could cause earthquakes when struck on the ground. Greek.
Trishula, the trident of the Hindu deity Shiva, stylized by some as used as a missile weapon and often included a crossed stabilizer to facilitate flight when thrown.

Source: Wikipedia - List of Mythical Objects (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_mythological_objects)

Now, I think Longinus would be a nice and cool name, don't you think? :)

The problem with throwing people around is that if you can use telekinesis freely on human beings, what's stopping you from getting their heart in a TK grip and crushing it into pulp?

*Uses Force Choke on Xena*

See my point? TK has the potential to be extremely haxxed if done wrong, so I limited it to non-magically protected objects and people.

I see you have been studying this from various angles. Good job! :D

*thumbs up*

The point isn't the shape of the spell, it's the magic involved. The bubble is essentially diverting all the air around Xiro before it makes contact with him and creates drag.

I think the shape you're looking for would be an aerofoil. Not sure if they are other shapes that reduce drag. Bernoulli's principles, Kutta condition, and Kutta-Joukowski theorem will help a lot in understanding.

In my defense I was running out of cool wind-based names to give to my spells. :uhoh:

Try Revolutions of Doom. :p Or Cyclonic Ripper. Or Whirling Dervish.

... If they don't suit, find more yourself. :p

Xena, were you present for the dehaxxing of Iris's reality marble, Winter Wasteland? I specifically limited that spell to ensure that she couldn't form her ice attacks inside and/or through her enemy, thus negating the possibility of instant unavoidable kills. Same logic applies here.

I was there, so I vividly remember you did. :)

Alright, if Xiro really rubs everyone the wrong way so much I'll take him back to the drawing board and turn him into a swordsman or something.

Nope, he doesn't rub me as wrong as Zero was in your first attempt. I think this is going to be passable, just work out the kinks.

PhoenixFlare

2008-05-20, 11:22

Double-post!

Zexion's forces get the drop on Vivio's unit and wipe out most of her squad. Zexion, however, takes a special interest in Vivio; he had a hand in Jail Scaglietti's rise to power, and decides to see what kind of Shadow Vivio would make. Before he gets a chance to do this, however, Vivio makes a blind tempspace jump, trusting in the Saint's Armor to protect her from the void of dimension space. Miraculously, it works... but her jump lands her on Arcadia, the center of the multiverse's criminal underworld.

The plot sounds all right on the surface, until it reaches this part. It's been mentioned before, I think, that space-time leaps are not particularly usable as spells, so you'd probably have to opt to use a dysfunctional "space-time teleporter" that's been plot-made to be in the vicinity and miraculously made to function, somehow :p.

Other than that, I don't see much of a problem. :)

XenahortCharybdis

2008-05-20, 11:26

Quite true, but seeing as he has so far given enough headaches to a number of person, I guess they're quick to judge the character by the merit of the author and not by the character itself, hence the bluntness. Well, you can say that he does give me headaches at first, but I think he's already improving a lot. :)

I suddenly feel so convicted *hand to heart* :upset:

Guilty as charged, ouch.

Here you go.

Amenonuhoko (heavenly spear), the spear used by the Shinto deities Izanagi and Izanami to create the world (Japanese mythology)
The Gae Bolg, the spear of Cuchulainn, given to him by Aife, the sister of Scathach, and made from the bone of a sea-monster (Celtic mythology).
Gungnir, Odin's magic spear created by the dwarf Dvalin. It would never miss its aim and it could not be stopped in mid-throw (Norse mythology)
Ogma's Whip - the spear of Ogma (the Celtic sun god) is used to "guide the passage of the invisible sun"
The Pelian Spear, Achilles' great mythical spear. Created by Hephaestus and given to Peleus at his wedding with Thetis (Greek mythology)
The Spear Luin (also Spear of Fire or Spear of Destiny), forged by the Smith of Falias for Lugh to use in his fight against Balor (Celtic mythology)
The Spear of Destiny (also Spear of Longinus or the Holy Lance), the spear said to have pierced the side of Jesus at the crucifixion
Rhongomiant, which was the spear of King Arthur.
Spears of the Valkyrie "Various" The weapons of the infamous Valkyries, these weapons are described as having flaming barbs.
Kongō, A trident-shaped staff which emits a bright light in the darkness. It gives a man wisdom and insight. The staff belonged originally to the Japanese mountain-god Koya-no-Myoin. It is the equivalent of the Sanskrit vajra, the lightning-jewel of the mountain-god Indra. There the staff represents the three flames of the sacrificial fire, part of the image of the vajra wheel.
Poseidon's Trident, used to create horses and some water sources in Greece. It could cause earthquakes when struck on the ground. Greek.
Trishula, the trident of the Hindu deity Shiva, stylized by some as used as a missile weapon and often included a crossed stabilizer to facilitate flight when thrown.

Source: Wikipedia - List of Mythical Objects (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_mythological_objects)

Now, I think Longinus would be a nice and cool name, don't you think? :)

Ah, Wikipedia: The number one source for all information random and fun :D

I think the shape you're looking for would be an aerofoil. Not sure if they are other shapes that reduce drag. Bernoulli's principles, Kutta condition, and Kutta-Joukowski theorem will help a lot in understanding.

Science talk, makes me feel really small :heh::heh:

Try Revolutions of Doom. :p Or Cyclonic Ripper. Or Whirling Dervish.

The first one sounds the lamest, and the last one sounds the coolest.

I'll take a crack at that too, if you don't mind :3

Zephyr Riot
Gale Edge
Gale Spire
Storm Render
Sky Render
Sky Cleaver
Sky Scorcher
Gust Pillar
Heaven's Lance
Cardinal Revolution
Cyclone Magnum (ha, ha, ha.)
Hurricane Sonic (ha, ha, ha.)
Boreal Swell
Eurusia Spiral

Nope, he doesn't rub me as wrong as Zero was in your first attempt. I think this is going to be passable, just work out the kinks.

Personal prejudices against porting count too :D

*hits self on the head for bigoted behavior*

oh well.

Evangelion Xgouki

2008-05-20, 11:30

as well as a coveted wind-elemental affinity

Uh...so why is having a wind affinity so special?

Shamsel: *shrugs*

I've been sort of absent, I know, but I recently managed to pick up a copy of Grandia.

Imagine me falling out of my bed in surprise when I saw my name come across the screen not even a few minutes into play. :eek:

Of course, that just begs for an OC-fication. :3

Wait...what?! Explain, now! :mad:

Regarding haxxbusting: I'm available on IRC at various times. Keep popping in there regularly and I'll be around to give a hand.

I'm tempted to go Abare but I'm watching Ozma's awesoem VF-25S and just can't stop giggling with glee at how that thing moves. And the MISSILE BUKAKKE. GLORIOUS MISSILE BUKAKKE.

AND FUCK YES KONIG MONSTER FOR THE ARTILLERY WIN.

*facepalms*

*proceeds to RIDER KICK Goose*

Keroko-chan: Haa- Haaa-chu!

Keroko-kun: Gezondheid.

Keroko-chan: *sniff* Thanks. Is someone talking about me?

Keroko-kun: *watches Xena fly away* Nope, no-one at all.

Lol :p

*nods* Or her oponent to see how the Blaster Sytem handled in melee combat, those two sound far more likely then testing it before Nanoha even knew of its existence.

You mean a moving target :p

Nanoha: How was that?

Tester: It...it hurt...

Nanoha: Scale of 1 to 10? 10 being really bad.

Tester: Um...4?

Nanoha: Alright then! Let's increase the output by 20% and try again. It needs more power! :D

Tester: ...mommy... :upset:

Here you go.

Amenonuhoko (heavenly spear), the spear used by the Shinto deities Izanagi and Izanami to create the world (Japanese mythology)
The Gae Bolg, the spear of Cuchulainn, given to him by Aife, the sister of Scathach, and made from the bone of a sea-monster (Celtic mythology).
Gungnir, Odin's magic spear created by the dwarf Dvalin. It would never miss its aim and it could not be stopped in mid-throw (Norse mythology)
Ogma's Whip - the spear of Ogma (the Celtic sun god) is used to "guide the passage of the invisible sun"
The Pelian Spear, Achilles' great mythical spear. Created by Hephaestus and given to Peleus at his wedding with Thetis (Greek mythology)
The Spear Luin (also Spear of Fire or Spear of Destiny), forged by the Smith of Falias for Lugh to use in his fight against Balor (Celtic mythology)
The Spear of Destiny (also Spear of Longinus or the Holy Lance), the spear said to have pierced the side of Jesus at the crucifixion
Rhongomiant, which was the spear of King Arthur.
Spears of the Valkyrie "Various" The weapons of the infamous Valkyries, these weapons are described as having flaming barbs.
Kongō, A trident-shaped staff which emits a bright light in the darkness. It gives a man wisdom and insight. The staff belonged originally to the Japanese mountain-god Koya-no-Myoin. It is the equivalent of the Sanskrit vajra, the lightning-jewel of the mountain-god Indra. There the staff represents the three flames of the sacrificial fire, part of the image of the vajra wheel.
Poseidon's Trident, used to create horses and some water sources in Greece. It could cause earthquakes when struck on the ground. Greek.
Trishula, the trident of the Hindu deity Shiva, stylized by some as used as a missile weapon and often included a crossed stabilizer to facilitate flight when thrown.

Source: Wikipedia - List of Mythical Objects (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_mythological_objects)

Now, I think Longinus would be a nice and cool name, don't you think? :)

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Nope, such a horrible name. It shouldn't be used at all!!

Shamsel: But didn't you just call our ship...

*deathglare*

Shamsel: ...yes, horrible name! :uhoh:

Keroko

2008-05-20, 11:36

Alright Kero, just for you I'll post this thing here instead of on IRC.

The first thing you need to know is that Vivio has acquired a few political enemies by virtue of being a clone of the Kaiser. Someone in High Command is worried that Vivio could gain immense political support from the followers of the Saint Church if her lineage were revealed, so they decide to do something about it.

Vivio (now a 12-year old air mage like Nanoha) and her unit are assigned to a milk run patrol of a planet on the outer rim of the TSAB's influence, Radiant Garden, without being given necessary intel regarding a large nest of Shadows that have cropped up on that planet.

A word on Shadows: these are essentially bio-magical zombies created as a disposable army by the Forerunners. They got loose and had to be sealed off in a pocket dimension, but Precia Testarossa's attempt at reaching Al Hazard managed to tear open a hole in the seal, and they've slowly been spreading across the outer reaches of the bureau's sphere of influence ever since. They spread by consuming the spiritual energy of living creatures, and the void that remains when a spirit is completely consumed reanimates the otherwise lifeless body as a basic Shadow, while in the process mutating and warping the physical shell into an inhuman form.

The Shadows of Radiant Garden are led by a Commander unit, a Shadow that has existed long enough to regain control of its' higher mental functions; where most shadows are basically predators with only basic instincts, Commander units are essentially mutated humans who have control over similar types of shadows, as well as some rather impressive magical powers. Each of the 13 commander units (who are about on par with S-rank mages) is based on the members of Organization XIII from Kingdom Hearts II. The unit in charge of the Shadows on Radiant Garden is based on Zexion, the Cloaked Schemer. For their part, the bureau has no idea that Zexion is present on Radiant Garden, or even that Commander units exist.

Zexion's forces get the drop on Vivio's unit and wipe out most of her squad. Zexion, however, takes a special interest in Vivio; he had a hand in Jail Scaglietti's rise to power, and decides to see what kind of Shadow Vivio would make. Before he gets a chance to do this, however, Vivio makes a blind tempspace jump, trusting in the Saint's Armor to protect her from the void of dimension space. Miraculously, it works... but her jump lands her on Arcadia, the center of the multiverse's criminal underworld.

It doesn't take long for Vivio's attempts to get home to attract the attention of the local crime lords, one of whom sends his top assassin to take care of Vivio.... which is where Iris enters the picture.

Iris is basically an Expy of Archerko; her abilities as a Steel Mage ring strongly of Archer's tracing abilities, but her personality is a mixture of the heroic sociopath (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/HeroicSociopath) and the blood knight (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/BloodKnight). Details on her past are sketchy at the moment, but count on something along the lines of "raised by the mob to be the perfect killer".

Iris goes after Vivio and gets Befriended because she can't hurt Vivio and she doesn't like to use "dirty tricks" like binds, poison gas, and other stuff that would put Vivio down for the count. Her boss doesn't like the fact that Iris gets all chummy with her target, and much of the initial story consists of Iris and Vivio running from the mob while trying to get home... only to discover that Zexion and friends have been rather busy in their absence when they get back to Mid-Childa.

Iris's spell loadout is rather limited at present time because I haven't yet put too much thought into her combat style. Obviously she's highly skilled in melee, but the only spell I have listed for her so far is a physical-type Bombardment spell which is basically a focused version of Gate of Babylon. (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DjYctJ1ZKpM) This would be her high-end max-power Unlimited Blade Works equivalent, not something she uses on a regular basis.

Hmmm, I'm really liking the premise of this idea. :D Mind if I play around in this reality with Syn? Or do you already have a romance for Vivio in mind?

I read it! In Slaine (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sl%C3%A1ine_%28comics%29) comic books!

http://img357.imageshack.us/img357/9536/resized20slaine20helmetcq1.th.jpg (http://img357.imageshack.us/my.php?image=resized20slaine20helmetcq1.jpg)

Altho his signature weapon is his axe.

.... You know, I never read that comic. I'm just a mythology junkie, so I know a thing or two about various mythologies. :heh:

Quite true, but seeing as he has so far given enough headaches to a number of person, I guess they're quick to judge the character by the merit of the author and not by the character itself, hence the bluntness. Well, you can say that he does give me headaches at first, but I think he's already improving a lot. :)

Very much so. A kink in the background was all I could find, his telekinetics idea was vastly underpowered in my opinion. :heh: Especially since we've seen Nanoha do something similar to Teana during the 'white devil training' episode.

Here you go.

Amenonuhoko (heavenly spear), the spear used by the Shinto deities Izanagi and Izanami to create the world (Japanese mythology)
The Gae Bolg, the spear of Cuchulainn, given to him by Aife, the sister of Scathach, and made from the bone of a sea-monster (Celtic mythology).
Gungnir, Odin's magic spear created by the dwarf Dvalin. It would never miss its aim and it could not be stopped in mid-throw (Norse mythology)
Ogma's Whip - the spear of Ogma (the Celtic sun god) is used to "guide the passage of the invisible sun"
The Pelian Spear, Achilles' great mythical spear. Created by Hephaestus and given to Peleus at his wedding with Thetis (Greek mythology)
The Spear Luin (also Spear of Fire or Spear of Destiny), forged by the Smith of Falias for Lugh to use in his fight against Balor (Celtic mythology)
The Spear of Destiny (also Spear of Longinus or the Holy Lance), the spear said to have pierced the side of Jesus at the crucifixion
Rhongomiant, which was the spear of King Arthur.
Spears of the Valkyrie "Various" The weapons of the infamous Valkyries, these weapons are described as having flaming barbs.
Kongō, A trident-shaped staff which emits a bright light in the darkness. It gives a man wisdom and insight. The staff belonged originally to the Japanese mountain-god Koya-no-Myoin. It is the equivalent of the Sanskrit vajra, the lightning-jewel of the mountain-god Indra. There the staff represents the three flames of the sacrificial fire, part of the image of the vajra wheel.
Poseidon's Trident, used to create horses and some water sources in Greece. It could cause earthquakes when struck on the ground. Greek.
Trishula, the trident of the Hindu deity Shiva, stylized by some as used as a missile weapon and often included a crossed stabilizer to facilitate flight when thrown.

Source: Wikipedia - List of Mythical Objects (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_mythological_objects)

Now, I think Longinus would be a nice and cool name, don't you think? :)

Nice list, I mostly stuck to Norse/Celtic weapons because that was what Cort seemed to be aiming for.

Nope, he doesn't rub me as wrong as Zero was in your first attempt. I think this is going to be passable, just work out the kinks.

*nod nod* Agreed.

The plot sounds all right on the surface, until it reaches this part. It's been mentioned before, I think, that space-time leaps are not particularly usable as spells, so you'd probably have to opt to use a dysfunctional "space-time teleporter" that's been plot-made to be in the vicinity and miraculously made to function, somehow :p.

Other than that, I don't see much of a problem. :)

They're usable, the Wolkies used them to escape the crew in the second episode of A's, after all.

I suddenly feel so convicted *hand to heart* :upset:

Guilty as charged, ouch.

Learn and improve Xena. :)

Uh...so why is having a wind affinity so special?

Shamsel: *shrugs*

Too much Kaze no Stigma, perhaps?

Wait...what?! Explain, now! :mad:

I'll give you a hint:

http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y191/Liinna/Nanoha/serious.gif

Now take 3 guesses as to what my real life name is. :heh:

Ye gods, even my name is a trap! :eyespin:

You mean a moving target :p

Nanoha: How was that?

Tester: It...it hurt...

Nanoha: Scale of 1 to 10? 10 being really bad.

Tester: Um...4?

Nanoha: Alright then! Let's increase the output by 20% and try again. It needs more power! :D

Tester: ...mommy... :upset:

And that's why I love her. :D

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Nope, such a horrible name. It shouldn't be used at all!!

Shamsel: But didn't you just call our ship...

*deathglare*

Shamsel: ...yes, horrible name! :uhoh:

Ah, selfishnes. :D