I'm glad you liked the first person narrative approach. I didn't particularly like putting Kotori on a bus (so to speak), but I felt it would provide a good situation to legitimize Eri getting more involved in Honoka's life.
Anyway, once your done all three chapters, please tell me what you think of it all.
Read a good bit of it so far. It was a little surprising and unknown how a HonokaxEmi pairing would go. I also like how you take Honoka's perspective in a first-person view to keep it interesting. Sad though that Kotori did have to go.
Sorry! Please forgive me about that D: I was going through some pretty heavy moments that I wouldn't believe I would've given a good enough review on it because of that. I'll read it after work today, since I'm feeling much better and thank you.
I don't want to be a nag about this, but I'm surprised that you didn't read my Love Live! fanfic after, since you did seem excited about it at first. If you did read it, but didn't like it, that's fine. I'm always open to constructive criticism.
Anyway, love your current Honoka avatar. It's very cute.