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  1. Kuroi Hadou
    2011-07-05 09:23
    Kuroi Hadou
    No problem.

    I'll try.
  2. Kuroi Hadou
    2011-07-05 09:15
    Kuroi Hadou
    There isn't much to change, honestly. The only real suggestion I have is to focus on either Index's dream or her interaction with the real Touma. Keep both of them, but make one of them the focus of the story.
  3. Kuroi Hadou
    2011-07-05 09:04
    Kuroi Hadou
    It'll probably be a few days before I get around to it: I just came down with a nasty bug. It's all I can do to type this...
  4. MeisterBabylon
    2011-07-05 03:49
    MeisterBabylon
    Maybe not when I'm in the middle of a busy rotation...
  5. Kuroi Hadou
    2011-07-04 19:44
    Kuroi Hadou
    Something wrong? You don't sound too thrilled...
  6. Kuroi Hadou
    2011-07-04 18:16
    Kuroi Hadou
    Oh, that reminds me: I need to finish beta-ing Part 3 of that Nanoha fic you PMed me.
  7. Kuroi Hadou
    2011-07-04 17:32
    Kuroi Hadou
    It's a good plan. You should include a few of Hamazura though; round out the Three Heroes.
  8. Kuroi Hadou
    2011-07-04 17:27
    Kuroi Hadou
    Uh... why Fukiyose?
  9. Kuroi Hadou
    2011-07-04 17:21
    Kuroi Hadou
    Do Imouto first.
  10. Kuroi Hadou
    2011-07-04 17:14
    Kuroi Hadou
    It happens.

    Somewhat. It's a good start, but it could use some fleshing out (pun not intended). I did my best to make it a bit more "reaction-inducing" using the writing style you used, but my recommendation is to concentrate more on the sensations than the actual actions. We all know how it's done (I hope ); what the readers want to know is what the participants are feeling.

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