Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha Character Creation and Discussion
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Join Date: May 2007
Location: Oxnard, CA
Well...part 4 is done, it's still long, and an OC appears, although I made her sorta out-of-character in my opinion.
SearcherS part 4
Thursday, May 27, MC 0075
Betrüger and Vincent were staring down at each other, waiting for either one to strike first. Eventually, Vincent went first.
Shell Bullet said, and the blade turned around, spinning fast enough to tear a person apart in pieces. Vincent dashed straight through, trying to finish the fight with Betrüger’s immediate death. He sidestepped to the left, though, and cleanly avoided Vincent’s attack, countering it with a slash to his back. Vincent turned clockwise to him, and Shell Bullet took the blow, fortunately not breaking under the energy blade.
“Interesting…your new arm seems to be tougher than your previous arm.” Betrüger mused. “I wonder…if you had it, would have you been able to kill me those 5 years ago?” he added, taunting Vincent.
” he yelled, pushing the blade out and attempted several quick stabs and slices at Betrüger, which he either dodged or blocked with his own Device. Betrüger then pushed him out, trying to make him hit the pipes to get an easy kill. “Faustform!” Vincent yelled to his Device.
he replied, and the blade turned back into a hand instantly. Managing to touch the ground with his hands, Vincent stopped himself from going into the pipes, and he got up, ready to take on Betrüger.
“Sat-chan, how long is this gonna take?” Margaret complained to her, climbing up the stairway. They had been going up for a while now, and it seemed like there was no end in sight.
“Don’t worry…we’re near there.” Satsuki said, seeing the end of the stairway. Managing to get up, they suddenly found themselves having to go through a seemingly endless line of doors, each in disrepair and looking like they were about to break at any second.
“Man….” Satsuki commented, but both of them made their way over to try to help anyone. Vincent was still fighting Betrüger toe-to-toe. “Sprinten sie Schnell!” he ordered to Shell Bullet, boosting his speed, and he tried to hit him with some clean shots. Betrüger matched him in speed, though, which surprised him, and kept on dodging Vincent’s hits. “You have to do better than that, boy!” he yelled, taunting Vincent again into making a big mistake.
Shell Bullet said, ejecting another 2 cartridges. Vincent dashed in an X-shaped pattern of fire, trying to get him. He still dodged Vincent’s attack, even dancing while dodging it to taunt Vincent more.
“God damn him…”
“He’s thinking that I’m nothing to worry about. He’s gonna see.”
“Schrotflinte Faust!” he ordered, trying to take down Betrüger with a multitude of magical projectiles, hoping that he would get swamped. “
” Vincent yelled, as the spell was casted, and the projectiles went towards Betrüger. He just stood there, though, and with a grin, pushed all them in the direction of Vincent himself.
Shell Bullet replied, and a triangular shield went in front of him, protecting him from his own attack for a while before the force of the projectiles broke it and sent Vincent flying a bit, hitting the pipes behind him.
The other projectiles went towards Satsuki, who dived down onto the floor, avoiding the shots. Smoke and debris covered the whole area around her. “Margaret?” she asked while coughing, concerned about what happened to her. After the dust cleared, Satsuki found out that the doorway between both of them was now blocked. “Sat-chan, I can’t get through!” Margaret said loudly. There was no time to move the debris out, so Satsuki said, “Margaret, go down again, and help Vince!”
“But…” she said, hesitating, “what about you?”
“I’ll be okay, just go!” Satsuki ordered back to her. “O-okay…” Margaret replied back, still hesitating.
“Now…time to help Vince…”
Thursday, May 27, MC 0075
1: 17 P.M.
“…I hope Nanoha’s okay…” Sydney said to Satoshi, worried about her.
“I hope she’s okay too…” Satoshi replied back as all of them went back to the Y-shaped corridor.
“Don’t worry….Nanoha can take it.” Vita replied. “Right!” Subaru said, agreeing with Vita. “I hope you guys are right…” Satoshi replied quietly. “Cipher….Defender Form…” he asked.
Cipher replied, switching the usual cross-shaped spear to a spear that had an L-shaped point. His Barrier Jacket also changed, which surprised everyone except Sydney. “Let’s go!” he said, and all of them moved on.
Vincent tried to deliver some quick kicks to Betrüger, but he dodged them all. Trying to not get his own legs cut off, he got distracted when Betrüger made a motion directed at his legs. Vincent fell for it, and he got pushed again into the pipes for the 6th time. At this time, he was coughing up blood, his body starting to buckle under the pressure.
“Kuso… I’m not gonna last that long if I keep on fighting him.”
he thought, before Betrüger finally took the offensive and moved quickly to finally kill him with one vertical slash. He could only look in horror as the blade neared him, imagining his own death before him.
“Blast Lancer!” someone yelled from above, sending out a multitude of magic beams down on Betrüger, forcing him to ditch his attack on Vincent. The shots went directly on him, rushing at him. He managed to defend himself as all of the beams eventually disappeared. Out of the corner, Vincent saw someone near Nanoha, trying to see what had happened. She looked like Nanoha herself, except with red hair. Vincent then got up, and saw that Betrüger was preparing another attack, this time at her. “Maschinegewehr Faust!” he yelled, using another 2 cartridges, and his right hand suddenly spun, shooting a load of magic projectiles at him. He had to ditch his attack again, but managed to push the projectiles into the ceiling, alerting everyone about the fight.
“Looks like we’re even.” Vincent said to the red-haired girl. “This is MY fight; take her and leave.” he coldly added after that.
“No…it’s now my fight if someone hurts Nanoha.” She replied. “and it’s Keroko.” she added after that, giving a little smile towards him.
“Heh…” he said, surprised at Keroko’s response. “Then let’s go and take him down.”
Thursday, May 27, MC 0075
“Damn it, someone found Betrüger…” Nobuyuki said quietly to everyone else as they went through the plant, their movement blocked by pipes that were deliberately cut to deny intruders a quick way to get to him.
“Nanoha…” Fate said, already fearing the worst. Nobuyuki could already tell that something bad happened, and it was coming to them soon.
Satsuki finally got to a control room, where she could easily see the battle below. “Ellis, Aim Support.”
Ellis responded, making a bipod to help Satsuki take careful aim at Betrüger. No matter how many times she aimed at him, though, she couldn’t take a shot without him always getting out of her sight. “Vince…I’m in position.” she told him telepathically.”
“Alright then, wait for my signal.” Vincent replied.
“Gotcha.” she said before being silent, waiting for his signal.
Already, both of them were fighting Betrüger, trying to take him down with each other’s help. “Stoßwelle Gewehrkugel!” Vincent yelled, having one of the spikes on his shoulder detract, and rushing at high speed towards him. He tried to push Vincent away, but Keroko followed up with her own spell. “Scatter Shot!” she yelled, aiming the sphere behind Betrüger’s feet, and launching it. The plan worked; his push didn’t work, and Vincent managed to get the first clean shot at him, which sent him back a bit.
“So…that girl can nullify my powers….”
Betrüger thought, as he managed to get up, coughing up some blood. “That was a nice combination….” he told Vincent and Keroko. “but let’s see you two do it again.”
“Maybe this time, I’ll get him now….” Vincent thought, as he and Keroko nodded to each other to do the same thing. “Sprinten sie Schnell!” he yelled, sprinting towards him, ready to do a roundhouse kick on him. Meanwhile, Keroko was preparing another Scatter Shot right where Betrüger was.
“Perfect, they’re taking it…”
he thought, grinning, as their plan was set into motion. Vincent stopped his sprint, jumped, and started his kick. Keroko followed it up with a Scatter Shot.
Betrüger quickly avoided Vincent’s kick, and jumped up into the air towards Keroko. She had already launched the Scatter Shot, and it stopped Betrüger from jumping any further, but it was too late; he had already gotten within range. “Axe Form!” she said to Artherion, her Device, and immediately prepared for melee combat.
she thought as Betrüger avoided her initial attacks. He managed to push her away from him, and put his hand towards the direction where she was at.
“My body….my body’s frozen….”
“Keroko!” Vincent yelled, trying to see what was wrong. Betrüger just turned around and coldly said to him, “She’s not going to bother us anymore…” before preparing to strike her down.
you!” he screamed, rushing him in order to block him.
“No….not another one!”
he thought. He wasn’t going to let anyone else die by Betrüger’s own hand. Not anymore.
He got in front of him, raising Shell Bullet out to block the slash. Vincent underestimated the power of Betrüger’s slash when he was blocking it. Shell Bullet buckled, and although it didn’t break, Betrüger managed to push Shell Bullet away far enough that he was able to make a slash that managed to make a vertical scar on his right eye.
he screamed, managing to push Betrüger away from Keroko in the process, putting the area of his right eye in pain.
“What the?” Satoshi said, hearing Vincent’s scream. “It couldn’t have been….”
Nobuyuki contacted Satoshi suddenly. “Did you hear that?” he asked. “Yeah, I did.”
Sydney realized the voice, and suddenly told both of them, “It’s Vince! He’s in trouble!”
“Damn it!” Satoshi thought. He told Nobuyuki, “Let’s hurry up NOW! We probably got more at stake here.”
“I agree.” Nobuyuki replied before cutting off the communication.
As they cut off, Margaret suddenly appeared in front of the group. “Margaret, what are you doing here?” Satoshi asked.
“Satsuki’s upstairs, and she told me to help Vince…” she explained.
“Then follow us and let’s go.” Satoshi replied, and off they went.
“VINCE!” Satsuki screamed, distraught on what happened to him. Her scream got the attention of both him and Betrüger. Betrüger put his hand out in Vincent’s direction, and he started floating and choking, just like what he did with Nanoha when Vincent first found him. “So, you got more people with you. Isn’t that right, boy?” he asked.
“T-that’s right…” Vincent replied, grinning. “But I’ll be the one to kill you…”
“Satsuki….take the shot now…”
he said to Satsuki, and she nodded, aiming at Betrüger to incapacitate him by hitting him in his right arm.
“Is that so?” Betrüger asked, noticing what was happening. Then, he dragged Vincent around to place him in front of Satsuki, making him a shield.
Satsuki recoiled. The scope showed that she was now aiming for Vincent’s head. She would never take a shot if it involved actually taking a life, especially if it was a person that she knew personally.
“S-shoot him now!” Vincent yelled, still trying to get his breath. “
“I-I just…I just can’t…” Satsuki thought as she had to look in horror on what was happening.
it!” Vincent yelled at her, not comprehending on why Satsuki didn’t shoot. “I thought so…” Betrüger said to him, before throwing Vincent aside like a rag doll. He then threw his Device straight at Satsuki, slicing out the supports under the room itself, intending to crush her under the debris. She barely escaped the falling room, but now was hanging on to a piece of what used to be the railing.
“My head….feels like crap….”
Keroko thought as she finally snapped out of the stasis.
“Looks like things have gone to hell.”
She then saw Betrüger preparing for another throw. “Scatter Shot!” she yelled out, and this time, she managed to disable the throw. Now Betrüger was defenseless, and she took that chance. “Snipe Shooter!” she yelled, firing a massive amount of projectiles at Betrüger. He tried to outrun them, but Keroko followed it up with another Scatter Shot, which left him without any defense. He took some of the blows before managing to get his Device, and block the rest. By that time, Betrüger was nearly on his knees.
“I’ve taken too much….”
“I have to finish this now. It’s time to use it.”
“At least you’re ready to fight…” Vincent said to Keroko with a smirk on his face. “Let’s just get this guy…” she remarked, and he agreed, not wanting to waste any more time on talking. As soon as they rushed for him, he got up, put out his hands, and out came blue lightning, surprising the two of them and shocking them both.
“I knew that he could do this, and I still fell for it…”
Betrüger laughed like a madman, and both Keroko and Vincent were suffering from it, with Satsuki watching.
Then, out of the blue, Raising Heart spoke.
it said, and 12 high-speed magical projectiles headed straight at Betrüger, surprising him and making him abort his attack once again. Both Vincent and Keroko looked behind them, and it was Nanoha herself. She was clutching her stomach with her right arm, holding Raising Heart with her left. Getting up, both of them immediately went to where Nanoha was.
“Nanoha-chan, arigato…” Keroko said with a bit of relief.
“Thanks, Captain…” Vincent also said, but he sounded like something bad happened. “My Device’s down for now…I can’t fight any longer…damn.”
Betrüger recovered from the attack, and tried to attack all of them when he was stopped by a bunch of bullets, fired from Ellis. Satsuki managed to get up during that time, and started to fire at Betrüger, which were blocked, but they did their job at distracting him long enough for Shell Bullet to start up again. Betrüger gripped Satsuki for firing at him, holding her out of the railing, ready for her to fall, but Vincent took action. “Scharfschütze Faust!” he yelled, shooting aimed projectiles at Betrüger, who blocked them. He let go of Satsuki, but Vincent expected this. “Shell Bullet, Leitung Form!” he ordered.
“[Halten Sie Ihre Hosen auf...]”
Shell Bullet replied. “…Save the remarks for later.” Vincent thought as Shell Bullet detached, and he threw the detached part to Satsuki. “Leitung Bindung!” he yelled, binding Satsuki and bringing her down to the ground safely. “Now, what was it about this bind that you said earlier?” Vincent boldly replied to Satsuki. Both Keroko and Satsuki gave him an irritated look. “Cut the chatter!” Keroko yelled after that, and they soon got focused on the task at hand.
“Damn you, boy….
you!” Betrüger screamed, ready to take down Vincent by any means necessary. He spun horizontally in the air, something that Vincent noticed, coming straight at him. “[Leitung Knall.]” Shell Bullet replied, moving the detached part on his right side, hoping to either take him out, or at the very least, make him abort his attack again. He managed to shoot, but Betrüger kept on going.
“Ellis, Bayonet!” Satsuki said to her Device.
it replied, and the energy blade appeared. She tried to defend Vincent against Betrüger, but her melee skills were not enough to successfully hold off Betrüger for long.
Keroko and Nanoha followed up, attacking Betrüger with an enormous amount of projectiles. He got hit several times, and yet, he continued to fight, shrugging off the damage like it barely did anything. He stopped attacking and laughed for a while, confusing everyone. “This is what all of you could do?” he said, still laughing. “What in the world do you mean?” Keroko asked, confused and frustrated. He just laughed for a while, before his voice took another tone, this time darker and colder. “You haven’t seen what we could do yet…”
“We?” Vincent thought. There was nobody else with him right now, and he doubted that someone else was waiting in the shadows for an ambush. Betrüger raised his arm, and out came a red-orange lighting bolt that affected everyone.
“I-it feels like I-I’m being drained somehow…”
Vincent thought, as everyone was subjected to this. It seemed to heal nearly all of his wounds, knocking out Keroko, Nanoha, and Satsuki in the process. “Wha-what was that?” Vincent said weakly to Betrüger, down on his knees. “That was just a bit of what we can do now.” Betrüger coldly replied. He then took out his Device, and prepared to take down Vincent, once and for all.
“Take the time to remember that you failed, and this time, we won’t make the same mistake of letting anyone live again.” Betrüger said, as he started to make a cut, decapitating Vincent should it happen. He could only watch in horror. His end was surely near.
something said, and Satoshi suddenly appeared, blocking Betrüger’s slash with the blade edge of his own Device. “You die if he does…” he said to Betrüger coldly, wanting to protect everyone else. Satoshi got out of the lock by pushing Betrüger’s blade out of the way. He tried to force Betrüger into giving up by disarming him, but Betrüger was a master with his weapon in close combat fighting.
“He’s good, fighting like this….looks like I’ll have to go with plan B.”
Satoshi thought as he broke off fighting with Betrüger. “Now!” he yelled, and his plan went into action.
Bardiche said, and a yellow blade of light came in, managing to hit Betrüger on the legs. “Ikuyo, Graf Eisen.” Vita said as she looked down.
Graf Eisen replied, and she dived down on him. Betrüger saw her, and tried to block her, but got hit on the stomach hard, which sent him back. Signum then followed up the attack, managing to get two good hits on him. Nobuyuki and Sydney struck after that.
“Shadow Cross…” Nobuyuki said coldly, and Betrüger was struck twice.
“Shard Shoot!” Sydney yelled, firing shards from all 4 barrels of Equinox, and most of them struck Betrüger. He was now on his knees, but he still tried to take everyone down. He put his right arm and hand out, ready to do something to everyone. “Blattform!” Vincent ordered to Shell Bullet.
Shell Bullet said, and with one quick cut, sliced off Betrüger’s right hand. Betrüger finally fell to his knees, holding where his right hand used to be a moment ago. Everyone pointed their Devices at him, confident that they had finally got him.
“Taking you in now….now, you could feel the pain I had to go through.” Vincent said to Betrüger with anger and coldness. “Pain…this is what
call pain?” Betrüger replied, laughing like some sort of madman, startling and unsettling everybody. He then put his left arm up in the air fast, and blue lighting came out, like before. This time, it affected everybody, causing them to fall down on the ground, screaming.
He stood up slowly, still continuing until almost everyone had passed out, except Vincent, which was on purpose. He then grabbed Vincent, and spoke to him. “You have the will….” he said nonchalantly, “but you don’t have the power to kill me right now. You, on the other hand…” he threw Vincent down and put out his left arm in his direction. This time, he saw everyone, standing there, as someone with a cloak over his head with a right arm just like his killed them all without remorse or even a sound. The person then took off the cloak. It was himself, he did it…
playing mind games with me, Betrüger!” Vincent screamed out. “Mind games? Boy, this is something different.” Betrüger said. His voice only echoed where Vincent was at, he wasn’t even there. Vincent tried to escape now; he was almost to the breaking point. As he moved, he felt like he was being restrained, until he was able to see that he couldn’t move at all. His other self moved towards him, without any emotion in his eyes. As silently as he appeared, he moved to Vincent, and stabbed him in his chest 2 times. The stabs felt real, he could feel it. He screamed; this was it. Finally, he returned to reality, now down on his knees in front of Betrüger.
“That was just a taste of true pain. If I wanted to show you what pain was fully like, you would have died. But, now, you seem a person that maybe is worth something.” And with those final words, finally destroyed Shell Bullet, with Vincent screaming every time those cuts were made. He finally fell down on the ground, completely broken. “You can’t kill me…what a shame...at least there’s still hope.” Betrüger mused, before finally leaving. “D-damn y-you….” Vincent said weakly, before finally laying down on the floor, shuddering on what truly happened.
“Ugh…that wasn’t what I expected…” Satoshi groaned, having recovered from that blast. Getting up he saw Vincent on the floor. “Vince! You alright?” he said.
“Alright?...No, I’m not “alright” damnit!” Vincent yelled to him before doing something that he never wanted to show anyone: he cried. He cried, seeing pain for what it truly was. Satoshi was stunned at what happened, and just let him cry out, not knowing what to do.
“What happened, Vince? What happened?”
He could only think, but couldn’t say directly to him. Leaving him alone for a while, he checked the status of everyone else. “Pulses on everyone…they’re alive…” he said softly to himself, before sitting down to take in what happened.
“He got away….he got away…” Keroko muttered, knowing what happened to everyone. Satoshi noticed her getting up and tried to help by putting his arm and hand out, but Keroko swatted it away, preferring to get up by herself. “He got away, and he hurt everyone…” Satoshi hesitated at first, but finally asked, “Are you okay?”
“Okay? I’m perfectly okay, if that meant that the bastard escaped and there was something I could have done to stop it. “she sarcastically remarked, angry at Satoshi’s question.
“If I had gotten sooner,” she said, frustrated, punching a pipe out to vent out her anger, “if I had just casted a bit sooner, if I COULD HAVE-“ she continued before punching the pipe one last time and stopping.
“…Gomen, Satoshi, I didn’t mean-“ she tried to explain, before Satoshi stopped her.
“Look, Keroko, there was nothing that could have been done right now. We could just only hope for the best now…” he said, defeated. This wasn’t the first time Sky Squad had seen defeat, but this day proved to be one of the most demoralizing and crushing ones. He finally got down to business, with Keroko just sitting down, disappointed.
“Spec 0, this is Sky 1…”
Thursday, May 27, MC 0075
5: 21 P.M.
As the rest of the 216th and Riot Force 6 finished investigation what was left of the site, Satoshi was sitting around the remains of an old car abandoned here, looking at the sunset, he couldn’t help but wonder, did he do something wrong? “Maybe…” he said softly, still looking at the sunset. The Major, after finishing talks with Hayate about the situation, saw Satoshi just staring. He approached him, and spoke. “Be glad you’re alive to see this today.” he said to Satoshi. “I am….” Satoshi replied softly.
“Then why are you so down?” the Major asked, although he knew the answer in his mind.
Satoshi didn’t bother to answer it; working with the Major, Satoshi already knew that he already had the answer. “Is everyone gonna be okay?” he asked.
“Satsuki and Sydney are going to be fine. They just need a bit of rest for a while. Margaret needs to be worked on, but, otherwise, she’s also okay.”
“Then what about Vince?” he asked again, putting his head down.
“His body has suffered some blows, as well as that scar on his right eye. His Device’s kaput; we need to restore it, and that’ll take time.” the Major replied. He knew that wasn’t the answer that Satoshi was looking for.
“I don’t know how he’ll cope with his mind, though. I was actually going to pull him out of this, but you know him, he’s not gonna stay in one place.”
“Yeah…that’s true.” Satoshi chuckled, but that was short-lived.
“It’s up to time and luck to get him back to his own self as much as possible. I don’t know what Betrüger did, but I’m sure that whatever he did, Vincent’s not gonna be the same anymore…”
The Major got up, and said to him, “Once we get back, you’re dismissed. Take some time off;I guess we’ll all need it.”
“Alright then, Major.” Satoshi replied, and got on the King Raven. As he got on, he suddenly started to have another headache. This time, it was sounds he could hear.
He could hear a small girl shuddering, while the sound of a gun ready to fire was nearby. He then heard an oddly familiar sound.
“What was that voice?”
he thought. “
I don’t know anyone who sounds like that…but it sounds so…familiar.
Thursday, May 27, MC 0075
Betrüger walked in the middle of a corridor, trying to see someone. He had already destroyed a dozen Gadget Drones when he went in, looking like he was trying to find someone. As he found an open door, he walked in, to the sight of a man with yellow eyes and purple hair, sitting near a desk.
“Scagletti….” he said in an annoyed manner.
“Betrüger… I presume you have something to say, since you did destroy about a dozen of my Drones outside.” he said, talking like it was normal conversation.
“Yes…about Nil….” he said, peaking Scagletti’s interest.
“Ah, Nil. I trust you found him?” he asked, this time interested.
“Yes, I have, although, he is not who he seems to be.” Betrüger said.
“It’s the TSAB.” Scagletti explained. “they always are hypocrites…”
“Well, when are we going to get him?” a voice from the shadows said.
“Sion, it is not time to strike yet.” Scagletti replied, “we have to wait until the right moment.”
“Still…I would like to see a brother of mine after these years.” Sion replied, still hiding from the shadows.
“I would also like to see how he’s doing.” Scagletti said in agreement. “but not now.”
“When the time comes….then he shall remember, and then, the Vessel of Saints will have its guardians…”
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