[WiliamZ0]

Anyone can give me a help ? I need your opinion about my Oc and I'm looking for a beta reader for my fanfic (TAMnI Alternative Testament) (I have remade it, but I don't think my grammar correct yet ... I also already start the next chapter of my fanfic)

I have 3 OC in my sleeve and Here is one of them (I still fixing the other 2)

Nakatsugawa Rinnosuke

Spoiler for Information:

Age :16
Gender : Male
Height : 174 cm
Classification : Esper

Spoiler for Appearance:

Silver long-hair around waist level and it tied like pony tail (around shoulder level) His hair will be cut short later.

He looked like person with 0% fighting abilities, but he actually able to defeat a very skilled Skill-Out in close combat without his abilities

He have yellow-golden eyes

Spoiler for Personality:

People with a strong sense justice want to protect.
He sometimes can be quite cold and annoying. He more like that he called as 'Sieghart' than his real name, only several people that may call him with his real name.
He is very like chess and strategy games
He is not dense like Touma.
There also a rumor that he likes boys (immediately deny by him)
He have a great analysis ability

Spoiler for Background ::

Almost like his sister, he is adopted by Heaven Canceler.

One of 2 Academy City's student in Academy City - England 'Students Exchange Program'
He is a Level 4 before leaving Academy City 2 years ago and already have a Level 5 power level when come back.

He also have a weird left hand with weird ability (he able to destroy everything in single touch if he wish it)

He was blind when he was born and a donor give his eyes before he died (which the reason why he don't have same eyes color with his twin sister), some how these eyes giving him a weird power.

He have sharp ear and sharp eye... too bad, they also quite sensitive to very loud sound or shiny light.

He is also quite dangerous , proven by defeating a Saint in battle when he tried to save some refuges from RCC that go to England (he not know anything about magic side though)

Childhood friend of Touma.

He is also quite skilled in martial arts and sword arts, he learned them to cover his weakness in close combat

Spoiler for Power::

-Phase Shift (Level 5) = affecting gravity around the user, increasing physical power at same time, making the user able to levitate, make things heavier or lighter, freeze enemies movement, creating black hole.

Spoiler for Information:

Effective area is about 25 m (in diameter), the user able to make even more bigger range but stamina will be wasted a lot.

The cooldown of the ability is one of most worst aspect in this power (Cooldown Time = 3 X Usage Time + ((Effective Area / 25 m) X 1 hours)) : if the area is under 25 m still count as 1

Ex: The ability use for 3 hours and the area about 0.1 km (100 m)
=> 3 X 3 + ((100 m / 25 m) X 1) = 13 hours cooldown

Ex: The ability use for 3 hours and the area about 20 m (since 20 m is under 25 m = it count as 1)
=> 3 X 3 + (1 X 1) = 10 hours cooldown

Another thing; once he turn off his ability, he must wait until the cooldown over before use it again.
But there is exception, if he use his power under 15 minutes and the range under 25 m, he only received 1 minute cooldown

X > 15 minutes and X < 1 hours, the cooldown will be count as 1 hour.

-Left Hand / Reality Breaker (???) = Single touch that able to destroy anything (physical term).

Spoiler for Information:

Effective Range = 1 m from his left hand; unlike Touma who need to contact, he doesn't need it.

He seemed able to turn off - on his ability (but his ability is rather confusing as it sometimes turn on itself, even though the user didn't wish it)

It have limitations though.

He can't destroy more than 1 thing at once; but if that thing is connected with the 2nd thing, he able to destroy it.
He also able to destroy multiple target, as long they are the same thing

(ex: a cup of water, he only able to destroy the water or the cup, since the thing isn't one part;
Another example, a wooden spear with metal blade and steel string, he able to destroy those things at once since the thing is one part.
He able to destroy many metal equipment at once, since the things are the same things (as long they are in his range))

There is a delay about 5 second between destroying the 1st thing and 2nd thing.

He can't kill human or animal with his ability (but, he can hurt them if he want.)

If Rinnosuke concentrated his attack in one point, Reality Breaker capable to use like invisible spear (range : 5m)

Totally Unknown like Touma's Imagine Breaker (but it is the factor that make Sieghart win against Saint, since spear = stab, stab is useful against Saint)

-Eyes of Illusion = make people fall into illusion for 1 minute

Spoiler for Information:

Useful when trick enemies or make enemies as slave for limited time or looking for people secret
Quite limited usage, only can be use up to 3 X per day
If the opponent's will / mental is strong, the power won't affect him

another info, he can't use his abilities at same time

Will be appeared at : After Chapter 6? (After Angel Fall event) (Touma's opponent) (Draw)