Congratulations for the new chapter, however, there's something I had to warn you
1.
Copycat Suing
2.
Spotlight Stealing
Those two problem often plaguing ANY fiction, and by that, fanfic included. Please read the url so you can understand what I mean. I personally liked your plot, it was pretty original, and the pacing is incredible. Also, I don't think
those two problem exist in your fic, until I placed myself as 'ordinary readers', not 'fellow fanfic author'.
Most readers doing their hobby of reading our fic from a specific angle, some can be simple, some can be tricky. The trickier one is hard to impress, but they're more attentive at spotting problems.
The only one thing I don't like form your fic, personally, is this passage
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"You pilots stay back and defend her! I'll try and hold this one off until she's done!"
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I understand that Inami's intention of saving the guys because he's kind and naive, however, from certain point of view, he also act arrogantly and looking down at other characters ability, leading to problem number 2.
Also, it was CHIFUYU who should take the mantle and command them, you're downplaying her (sucky) commanding ability, which is good, but at the same time doesn't makes sense considering she has highest authority.
(Yeah I knew, her tactical judgment is crazy and stupid, but procedure is procedure right?)
My last advice, DO NOT TAKE THIS if your feelings saw this as not right, this is only advice to broadened your POV, and that you should saw your own story from various angles.