[DarkJak2050]

Originally Posted by ZeroXSEED

Depends on the context of the current expression

If they see a guy with a scar, and frowning, they probably think of delinquents, and most will took a step or two away.

If they're smiling, as in, pure unsarcastic-noncynical smile, THEN they might be curious, because most probably it's an accident or something.

Well, okay. I think what you said first could be the case with my guys. But does it matter what they see first, either a picture of them or actually them?

And here's something that I felt that needed to be cleaned up. This is from chapter 7 in the 1st arc.

Spoiler for Ch. 7 scene (Before):

"Derrick! No!"

*BOOM-PHEE-EW!*

*BOOM-PHEE-EW!* *BOOM-PHEE-EW!* *BOOM-PHEE-EW!*

*BOOM-PHEE-EW!* *BOOM-PHEE-EW!*

Claymore grenades went off, but the explosions they made were different.

These ones went off in a blue energetic explosion as opposed to the shock and fiery explostion.

The multiple explosions caused the wall near them and the massive ceiling above them to collapse on top of them.

After the dust settled from all of the chaos, the electrical web vanished.

I frantically tried to get up so I can get to the pile of rubble in a desperate attempt to get his remains. But someone is trying to pick me up.

"Hot Shot!"

It was Scourge; he's trying to pick me up. But whenever he tries, I just collapse again.

"He's gone!"

I fell back down on my side.

"He's gone! There's nothing you can do!"

I tried to get up again, with Scourge, he's not really helping.

"Stop it!"

"Get off of me!"

Collapsing again, I tried to get Scourge to back off.

"Goddamn it! Let me get him out of there!"

I struggled to get back up again and trying to get Scourge off of me at the same time.

*BOOM-PHEE-EW!*

We both looked at the rubble pile as another explosion went off.

"Hot Shot…"

"…"

Sorrow, agony, failure, defeat…

All of these emotions are churning around as I watch the dust and rubble settle.

"Eric, come on, man. We have to go now. Ratchet and Hawkeye got the door open for us…"

…

"… Big Bro."

In utter despair, I slowly began to get myself up while looking at the rubble.

Spoiler for Ch. 7 Scene (After):

“Derrick! No!”

*BOOM-PHEE-EW!*

*BOOM-PHEE-EW!* *BOOM-PHEE-EW!* *BOOM-PHEE-EW!*

*BOOM-PHEE-EW!* *BOOM-PHEE-EW!*

Claymore grenades went off, but the explosions they made were different.

These ones went off in a blue energetic explosion as opposed to the shock and fiery explostion.

The multiple explosions caused the wall near them and the massive ceiling above them to collapse on top of them.

After the dust settled from all of the chaos, the electrical web vanished.

I frantically tried to get up so I can get to the pile of rubble in a desperate attempt to get him out. But someone is trying to pick me up.

“Hot Shot!”

It was Scourge; he’s trying to pick me up. But whenever he tries, I just collapse again.

“He’s gone!”

I fell back down on my side.

“He’s gone! There’s nothing you can do!”

I tried to get up again, with Scourge, he’s not really helping.

“Stop it!”

“Get off of me!”

Collapsing again, I tried to get Scourge to back off.

“Goddamn it! Let me get him out of there!”

I struggled to get back up again and trying to get Scourge off of me at the same time.

*BOOM-PHEE-EW!*

We both looked at the rubble pile as another explosion went off.

“Hot Shot…”

“…”

…

If there’s one thing that I’ve learned in these 5 years of being in Thunder Crash, it’s that not everything will remain the same; especially when it comes to death.

Me, Eddie, Brian, Clay and Derrick have learned that throughout our lives we know that someone will die. It was all a matter of time and who will it be.

The only problem is we won’t know when and who it is, until it actually happens...

“Eric, come on, man. We have to go now. Ratchet and Hawkeye got the door open for us…”

…

“… Big Bro.”

I weakly began to get myself up as if I’m struggling to carry a huge weight, while looking at the rubble pile where Derrick’s Kanabo is sticking out from.

Which one you guys think is better?