[Zero Shinohara]

Well, l was ready to say "Do I see some Rozen Maiden fan here?", since I realized the whole Yakult deal. Since Gin directly relates to "Lactic Acid Bacteria"... But then I saw your last line of text there, and I felt disappointed with myself :P

Anyway, I didn't have time to read it all, but I think you have one hell of a tallent to write, and your vocabulary is pretty vast as well, so your work doesn't get boring, and it's pretty rich. The storyline looks very promissing and interesting, so I'm sure you're on the right track. Keep going, I'll definetly keep up.