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Mistress of Impatience
Join Date: Apr 2007
Location: In a place of extremes. From below freezing to above boiling.
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OK. If school doesn't kill me, backlogs will <<.>>
In anycase, thanks for the comments guys. Thinking clearly now (I was working on this at 1:00 AM yesterday  ) yeah, it is weird for parents to simply say "OK, we're moving", so I modified the story. Here's the whole profile all over again, the only thing changed is the history, so don't bother reading the rest.
Spoiler for Improved profile:
Name: Risa Nakamura
Age: 15 years old
Birthday: December 16th
Mage Rank: AA
Magic Type: Mid-Childa Mage
Magic Color: Orange Circle
Elemental Preference: Fire
Squad Position: Fullback
Height: 162 cm
Weight: 65 Kg
Hair Color: Brown
Eye Color: Blue
Zodiac: Sagittarius
Weapons: Shinai, Bow, transforms into a Violin
Defense Outfit: Barrier Jacket Powered
Relationships: Hiro Nakamura: Older Brother; Angela and Lucas Hale: Friends
Nickname: Sa-chan
History: Once a normal child, Risa used to daydream about being one of the young adventurers form the stories her mother used to tell her before she went to sleep. She had a carefree childhood and played a lot with her big brother Hiro, whom she loves a lot. One time though, while she and Hiro went to play in the nearby woods that were close to their home, they heard strange noises coming from somewhere near their playing ground. Intrigued by this, they both went to see what the ruckus was all about. After a bit of exploring, they discovered two kids of about their age. One of them, the boy, was handling a medium sized scythe and swinging it full force at the other kid, the girl, who jumped out from the scythe’s range and replied by striking him with what looked like an axe-like staff. Gaping at them with her mouth open, Risa couldn’t believe what she was seeing. What were these kids? After they finished their battle, they looked at her and Hiro, still gaping at them. They talked for a while, they explained who they were and very soon became close friends. A few days later, she and Hiro were asking Lucas and Angela to teach them magic. They studied hard and, in the end, they finally learned how to fight properly. Happily, they went home after saying good-night to their friends and had a talk with their parents about who Angela and Lucas really were, about the time they spent ‘playing’ and asked them if they could move from Earth to Mid-Childa so they could continue their magical studies. Their parents refused absolutely, thinking that their children had gained an amazing imagination and whoever heard of such a tale.
Frowning at her parents’ closed minds, she and Hiro looked at each other and nodded in agreement. They asked their parents to go outside with them for a bit and, though reluctantly, the adults went along wondering what trick they were trying to pull. Out in their garden, the children demonstrated a few of their newly found abilities. After the short demonstration, their parents were aghast at what they had just witnessed. Not being able to believe their eyes, they asked their children to give them some time to discuss and think it over. Grinning, the siblings agreed and they retired for the night. In the morning, their parents told them their decision. Even if they could use magic, it was unreasonable of them to ask all of a sudden to move to a different planet. When the siblings looked at them as though a meteorite had just crashed in front of them, their parents smiled and said that, while they wouldn’t move from Earth, there was no reason their children should stay. Risa’s eyes immediately lit up but Hiro asked for further explanation. Their parents explained their plan of talking with their mage friends’ parents and asking them if they could take both she and Hiro back to Mid-Childa, expenses paid of course. They organized a meeting while the children played and came to an agreement. After the meeting they kept chatting and each family decided that the other was very likable. About two days later, Angela and Lucas had to go back, not without saying good-bye though and the siblings greeted them smiling.
Not wanting to ruin the surprise, Risa gave them nothing more than hints about meeting again soon. After they left, the preparations to move to mage territory began. When the procedures were finally finished, which didn’t take more than 1 week, they moved to a small apartment their friends’ parents had lent them for the time being, going along with the ‘surprise’. Once settled in, they went to the TSAB Academy to study properly. Weeks seemed like days to the siblings since studying was so much fun. They also took particular care to not be seen by their friends, wanting to surprise them when they passed the test for official officers of the Bureau. Finally, the time for the entrance exams came and passed. She and Hiro paced the corridor awaiting the results, nerves on the edge, remembering all the faults they had committed and sometimes glancing at each other with worried looks. Then a staff member came out of the evaluation room and posted a sheet with the results in the message board. They both ran at it and looked for their names. “Hiro Nakamura: Accepted as Private Third Class in the Ground Division. Positioned in Temporary squad number 146.” Risa read out loud “Risa Nakamura: Accepted as Private Third Class in the Ground Division. Positioned in Temporary squad number 146” Hiro read out loud.
They both laughed out of relief. They had passed! And they were in the same squad too. After asking around for a while, a Sergeant led them to meet their other squad members. When they saw their new partners they thought they were in heaven. Standing right in front of them were Lucas and Angela! Risa immediately jumped her friend, it should be noted that Angela did the same though, and hugged her for five minutes. While this happened, Hiro and Lucas shaked hands happily and gave their respective little sisters amused looks and mocking grins. They’ve been inseparable ever since and they eventually were placed under Officer Ivanov. Their squad gained a new name and Risa got a few promotions, from Private Third Class to Leading Private.
Personality: Risa, A.K.A Sa-chan, is a Mid-Childa style mage that concentrates on support but still has very powerful offensive skills. She started using magic at the age of 10, after her meeting and befriending Lucas and Angela Hale and has shown very satisfying results in the field.
Risa enjoys walking wherever there’re trees, flowers and such. She’s a born Nature-lover and composes poems about it from time to time. Being a romantic, she also likes to read shoujo stories and particularly enjoys listening to Cass talk to Alex. When she does, her voice softens and she smiles a lot more, proof that she’s in love, so Risa likes to imagine what they do when they spend time alone.
Cheerful and carefree, she’s also very serious when it comes to working and, when on the field, she will not take nonsense from other people. Preferring to give support so the rest can rely on her, she chose to become the Fullback of the team. She’s very soft-spoken and mild mannered although she daydreams a bit too much and loves her brother Hiro very much. She and Angela are best friends and the boys sometimes worry about them plotting something against them.
Bow Attacks:
Flaming Arrow: Arrows charged with Fire properties that go straight against the designated target.
Arrow Strike: Shoots a single arrow with great strength against the designated enemy. This particular type of arrow will pass anything in its way as if it wasn’t solid until it hits its assigned target.
Arrow Shower: Shoots 4-5 arrows at the same time non-stop. These arrows may be attributed elemental properties of desired. Multiple target attack.
Double Strafe: Strikes an enemy twice with one arrow shot. It damages enemies that are in the way and it may be reinforced with cartridges for maximum force.
Violin Mode Attacks:
Infernal Lullaby: Plays a song that will send the targets to sleep. His/her worst nightmares are represented as long as the song goes on. Multiple-target spell.
Supersonic Sonata: Supersonic waves affect the enemies caught in this attack’ area range. Allies are protected from the effects by an automatic pre-casted barrier that surrounds them. For the barrier to be casted, the mage must have pre-recorded the names of the said allies.
Demonic Rhapsody: Bolts of lightning fall from the sky at the same time as fire pillars erupt from the very core of the Earth, heading straight towards the targets caught in the area. Enemies are immobilized by the song. Area-of-effect attack.
Burning Prelude: Invokes two or more fire based staffs that stab the opponent or engage combat on their own.
Healing Minuet: Plays a beautiful minuet that acts very much like Cass’s Soothing Breeze, except this spell heals multiple targets at the same time.
Quiet Serenade: Magical tune that speeds up the target’s regeneration system. Cures major injuries.
Combined Attacks:
Arc Impulse: Hiro casts ice properties into Phoenix, while Risa casts fire magic to Firebrand, then Lucas jumps into the air and turns around in a downward motion, giving a strong slash, just as Angela slashes the enemy in a diagonal way, forming a fire and ice cross-shaped wound on the target.
Phoenix Song: As Risa plays a Nocturne that will dramatically slow down the enemy, Angela slashes them apart.
EDIT: Additional info on Risa
OK. Moving on.
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Originally Posted by LoweGear
For some reason, I seem to have so much fun with writing my profile stories that they end up longer than I intended them to be. Anyways, here's the Epilogue to the Necron Arc in Glock's Pro, Part I, departing from the first-person Kay style of the past few takes
Spoiler for length:
Kay: Rey, would you continue the rest of the profile? I don’t think I can write more than I already have…
Asuka: You better, any more and Kay will drown us in tears...
Kay: Ore no…
Asuka: BETRUBT!!! GOMENASAI!!!!
Kay: Better.
Rey: I’ll do my best.
That day ended when Glock carried Kay off the battlefield, leaving the Monolith Fortress, as the black pyramid is known today, to its fate. Both Glock and Kay collapsed upon their arrival at the expedition base camp, having sustained multiple serious injuries, and had to be brought to the field infirmary for treatment and recovery. Most of the Limiera Expedition Team had made it back, save for three casualties, including team leader Dr. Altis Macabee, who went missing immediately following the activation of the Monolith. He was never found.
Team sub-leader Brian Croft would cancel the entire expedition, until further investigation into the nature of the site could be conducted. Soon after the Limiera Expedition left, a rift storm formed over the entire J-99 spatial area. Midchilda Meteorological forecasts estimate the storm to last for four months, making a return trip to the worlds affected during that time, including Megiddo, impossible.
Both Glock and Kay woke up a week after the incident, and both took another week to recover from their injuries. Glock would not file an official report on this incident, due to past experience, and the non-interference of the machines in inter-dimensional affairs. Sofia’s new form was explained as a custom upgrade, an explanation that satisfied any queries regarding the storage device.
As per Glock’s instructions, the Limiera Archaeological Institute would provide alternative explanations for the events in Megiddo, including the loss of Dr. Altis Macabee. The entire expedition was deemed “inconclusive” and all research regarding the items and artifacts acquired during the expedition were to be kept classified, and all results unpublished until further notice. Even with the lifting of the rift storm, the Institute has expressed no plans for a return expedition to Megiddo, citing insufficient reasons to fund a return trip. No other expeditions, archaeological or other, has ever been made to the 198th world before or since.
Kay: Concise, surgical, and straight to the point.
Shinji: Kinda counter-climactic don’t you think?
Asuka: I don’t know what’s worse… Kay’s constant breakdowns or blue-girl’s incredibly brief post.
Kay: I wouldn’t expect any more as it is though. Good job there Rey.
Rey: Thank you, but I am not finished yet.
Asuka: Oh?
Kay: Let’s just let Rey continue shall we? *glares*
Asuka: Da!
Shinji: Hai!
Glock would later recount his experience after his mysterious collapse. The recorded audio log is available for inspection, but I shall be transcribing it down for the purposes of this profile:
Kay: By the way… I haven’t really taken notice when I was writing… but where do you keep getting these audio logs? They seem to take place much earlier than your HD limit would… wait a minute…
Rey: I apologize in advance once again. The HD module upgrade you gave us 12 months ago allowed me to keep recent audio logs I recorded during select moments without having to delete older files. I have a full inventory of audio logs dating back to 8 months from this date.
Kay: Rey, we REALLY need to talk about moderating that habit of yours LATER. Right now, I’m quite intrigued by what you recorded. Nothing’s better than having a tangible piece of the past to look to.
Asuka: Even in times like these, she thinks like an archaeologist…
*Play audio log 359*
"Glock: Where do I start?
That sensation. I felt a sharp pain at the back of my neck, like someone just stuck a needle at me. I didn’t know what it was, but I guess I got knocked out right after.
I was never unconscious though. It was like a dream. I could more accurately describe it as sleep paralysis, knowing you’re awake and yet unable to move your body, your mind still trying to hang on to the dream it just had. My vision became restricted and blurry, similar to glaucoma. I couldn’t move my head, and yet I could see you yelling at me, shaking me frantically trying to wake me up. I remember you saying, “Wake up you bastard, you picked a bad time to fall asleep on me now.”
Kay: Erh…
Glock: I don’t mind at all. It’s typical of your behavior afterall.
Kay: Be grateful I can’t move, or I’d kill you on the spot.
Glock: I’m glad I can say I don’t believe that. After all you did for me back there.
Kay: Uhm…erh… so you’re telling me you were awake the whole time?
Glock: I was, yes.
Kay: F***…
Glock: I know. Moving on, I did feel desperate when I saw the Type 4 knock you out…
Kay: Type 4?
Glock: *deep breathing*
Ever since Solaria, I have strived to regain some order in my life. I tried to rationalize what I just went through, and I tried to reduce them into categories and classifications that’ll make them feel neutral. I wanted to think of them as just numbers in a category. I did that to all the undead machines I encountered that day. I labeled the machine that attacked you as “Type 4”. The leader-like machine I labeled “Type-0”, and the thin, black skeleton grunts as…
Kay: Enough with the classifications already! Even I don’t want to be reminded of what just happened. But I’d rather not reduce the past to simple numbers and letters and classes, because they were, and they ARE real, unquantifiable experiences, that have real consequences in our futures. No matter how bad, I want to remember them as it happened, rather than cloud the past with figures and statistics that don’t show you an ounce of what took place.
Glock: Sorry about that.
Kay: Don’t be, perhaps I just said too much there. I really didn’t think you’d go that far in explaining my question though…
Glock: Sorry about that.
Kay: Stop that, you tape recorder!
Glock: I didn’t even notice… but after everything you’ve done for me back there, I do feel like I can trust you a lot more now. You said so yourself after all.
Kay: Erh… thanks… uhm… I do hope that trust extends to my worksites as well.
Glock: No.
Kay: Bastard. So you were saying again?"
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I LOVE IT! Lowe, you must write a fic. Kay is very funny 
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Originally Posted by stormturmoil
And, as a follow on to Glock's epilogue of the Necron Arc
Spoiler for confrontation.:
" so, you want me to join the losing side?" Mobile unit 13, once known as the Terran David Brown asked of the skeletal figure before him, it's gold and emerald clad embellishments marking it out as the leader almost as much as it's whispering, wheedling voice.
" you do not believe you can ever return to them?" It cajoled
" That's the strange thing...I don't need to believe...I know I can. It may be difficult, and there may be roadblocks along the way, but in time, I can go back...whereas with you...I saw how you treated the so called traitor...I know your attitude to life now...and it stinks..." He warned...
" So for all that you seemed to be superior form, you side with the inferior, proving yourself lowest of all, the worst of the worst..."
David grinned, " I can live with that..." he answered, emphasising the 'live' part. as expected, it drew a response...
" Then allow us to remove from you that terrible, terrible burden..."
" Not today. We all have a burden to carry, and if this is my burden, then I'll carry it for as long as I can...you, on the other hand, have most definitely overstayed your welcome..." Finishing the sentence, David hefted the hammer in his hand.
"you would fight us, all alone in the dark? you would fight that older than time?"
" I will fight you so they don't have to...I will make sure that you will never plague their lives again!" David sprung into a charge. The skeletal Lord raised it's own terribly glowing staff, charged with light, to parry that monstrous descending mass...
Only to find itself in totally the wrong place, as David leapt over it in a Gravity wave powered leap, bringing the massive metal mallet down to crash ringingly on the glowing green rystal that stood at the apex of the pyramidal Monolith that was both fortress and entrance to this plane...and with an effort of will, wave motion energy flowed through his frame, into the huge hefty implement, and the incredibly obdurate material of the crystal and the peculiar living metal that surrounded and supported it began to dissolve into randomized motes of light...
Streamers of light rippled across his frame as he soaked up all the ambient wave energy in the cavern - light, heat, sound, electromagntic energy, seismic stress waves in the earth, even the shivering vibrations of the living metal itself, and the peculiar palpitations of spacetime its portal rent on the fabric of reality- focused them, transformed them, and forced them out upon the target of his weapon
" Now, you evil sod, we'll see how you like being alone- Now, monstrous Monolith- HIKARI NI NARE!"
before the aghast eyes of the stunned Necron Lord, the unthinkable happened as a Mighty Monolith - instrument of the C'Tan, tool of his God, was rent by this puny being into no more than floating motes of light...
Standing within the maelstrom of light and fury at the heart of that collapse, the one who had caused this ruin completed the act by turning his back on the Lord, shunning him completely.
"What have you done? You think this will protect you? Protect those still labouring under the curse of life? All this has done is made you an enemy in the eyes of the Gods..."
" Like I care. I can live with being people's enemy...but that thing was your ticket across the dimensional barrier, wasn't it? Oh I have no doubt that eventually, you'll be able to achieve another breakthrough, bring another of the things in and set up another foothold, but for now, you're trapped here, all alone...and the rest of your minions will have to spend who knows how long trying to create another breach...time you can't afford to have to spend...because it means when you do break through again...They'll be ready for you...I'LL be ready for you..."
" Know only this...this is not the end...for just as I am older than time itself, so yet I need not fear it, and I can afford to wait. I existed before this tiny cosmos you call a universe was born, and I will exist to see it die...such is the will of My God, who will be the one to bring about it's death...in the end, all who know him, fear him, and rightly so, for he is the end of all things... "
" Doesn't matter. It doesn't matter what you think he is or what he claims to be...he is his own worst enemy...because when you inflict fear upon people...you give them a power they wouldn't otherwise have had...All that your Lord's fear does is draw out a greater power from within every living being, a power that will defeat him. Fear is the catalyst of courage, a power only the living can posess. I understand that now. That's why I'll fight for them, even if it has to be on my own, in the shadows, because ultimately, they will defeat you. Nothing can change that..." David answered, feeling for the first time in altogether too long a time a trace of emotion...the icy chill of fear was indeed present, the power he had heard referred to as the ' Nightmare Shroud' undoubtedly responsible for stirring such a response, small though it was, within him, but from deeper within came a counter, richer and greater, a warmth and fire that beat it back...he was ALIVE, for the first time in too long, he recognised it...and what it meant...
The Necron Lord backed away, and faded into the shadow, fading away into a phase shift that lead not even it knew where, it's link to it's home plane severed for the moment. It would not forget. I could not forgive. But it could wait, ever watching, ever patient, for when the time came to rise again. For the moment, it could afford to wait.
David walked from the cavern, feeling for the first time in almost seven years the power of life flowing through him. The days ahead might be diffcult, but he could face that.
At the entrance to the cavern, he hefted his hammer, struck down onto the hard rock, and from the tool flowed seismic shockwaves that rent the rock around him, shivering the stone with the force of a massive magnitude Earthquake. The obdurate stone resisted for a moment, before it splintered, shattered, and the entire cavern collapsed behind him. Some things were best left buried.
Stepping onto the surface, David looked at the strange skyline of an alien world, for the first time, with a sense of wonder. For too long he had wandered through fantastic worlds with eyes too blind to see, senses too dulled to notice. The world had moved around him, and he had ignored it...now, that wasn't an option for him, because he knew, he owed it, to himself, and to someone else, too...
Some where, far way, a woman lay still, Never moving amid the sterile white of her hospital bed, alive but endlessly dreaming, trapped in the prison of her own mind. Unwaking, ever dreaming. She had caused her coma herself, wrenching her mind beyond it's limts to seize control, if only for amoment, over her own body, which had been used like a marionette... her antique Device the puppeteer...and him the target of it's mission...
She had saved his life, at the cost of her conscious mind. Now, he knew, he had to repay that debt in the only way that really mattered. The only way he could...
By being worthy of it.
He'd spent too long merely existing from day to day, continuing merely as an act of inertia. Now it was time to live
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Very interesting. Good thing David realized what he had to do. Keep it up
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Originally Posted by Meophist
Mow Yun, thought of a background for your character. Tell me what you think of it.
Spoiler for Krystal Nenotna:
The little girl who was created in a lab was considered a failed experiment. Although they succeded in creating a girl with nearly unmatched magical potential the end result was unstable and, at times, unresponsive. She ended up being neglected, only being given the basic necessities of life, while the scientists worked on other experiments.
The lab was operated by a group that was opposed to the TSAB and had a number of Lost Logia that was stolen from them, most of whose functions were unknown. One day, Krystal decided to flee from the facility, and grabbed one of the Lost Logias quickly before the escape. Surprising her, however, the Lost Logia reacted to her, and turned into a copy of her, also gaining her memories. Together, they escaped the lab and was later found by the TSAB. After hearing thier story, the TSAB raided the lab and arrested the people in it.
Krystal and her clone both became a part of the TSAB. In combat, the original proved to be often reckless and lacking in control so her clone trained to be her support in order to protect her. The two worked together as a team but as time went by, the original's instability became more and more evident, a flaw that the copy lacked. She was soon considered dangerous to her allies in combat but her clone continued to stick by her. However, in one of the missions they took alone, the original stopped responding completely and died soon afterwards.
This is the second background story I've thought up for your character, but then I found that it's incompatible with the background you've already provided. So, I'm going to just give up for now and just post what I have. Maybe I'll try again some other time. |
Interesting, although yes, it kind of clashes with the previous background. Nice try though  .
Last edited by Fuyu no Sora; 2007-06-23 at 12:45.
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