[Kaijo]

Originally Posted by 00-Raiser

Spoiler for Future Tense, Chapter 27: Return:

the voice was echoed in (the voice echoed, or the voice was echoing)

shivering as a breeze (she's inside the ship, right? How would there be a breeze?) - Ships have a ventilation system to circulate air. Breeze might not be the best term to use, though. Perhaps air current or something, I'll see

grabbing one of Teana's pig-tails (wait, why is Teana wearing her hair in pig tails? She stopped that ages ago) - Haha, good catch. I could say they've come back in style (every fashion always comes back!) but I'll probably change it.

while Due tucked the handgun (would Due really need a hand gun? I think she should have used her claws) - It was something I considered. Her claws could actually make things a bit messier, as Regius can attest(3 points of impact vs. a single one for the gun); a single bullet could actually let Yuuno live longer, stretching out his pain and thus provide more impact on Shari to talk. And Due is still carrying Silver Dagger, which is what she used, although I probably should have clarified. Cell bars separate the two groups, so I'd have to have them opened for her to attack that way, and I a gunshot seems to have the slightly better impact here, in a literary sense. Claws are more Due-like, I'll agree, but they didn't seem to fit.

I'll see if anyone else comments on this, before deciding where to go.

Some corrections and comments in the quote.

Well, it's nice that things feel back on track again

Thanks for the comments and stuff again! I'll think those few things over and see where I want to go, pursuant to any other comments I get.