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Originally Posted by Kagedanji
Hoping we're not dead.
Anyway, BEFORE I POST IN THE FAN CREATIONS THREAD, I want to know if you think this story idea is interesting enough or not. It's an excerpt of what MIGHT be a full fanfic. I don't want to continue the work all for nothing.
It's basically a fic that's somewhat of a continuation of Haruhi. The main point is adding a new character and having him narrate the story instead of Kyon. This may sound corny, but the main character is supposed to be a persona of myself. Yeah, self-insertion fic. That's why I'm afraid of actually working on it and showing it off.
Constructive criticism. Let me know if it looks worthy.
Spoiler for Fic:
I could only stare outside the window. There was nothing else to do in this boring school. Usually, transferring is supposed to be exciting, but this school was a bit too much like mine. Clubs? Filled. Council? Work. Teams? Sports is my weak point. It's so goddamn boring! Wait, did I just say that out lo-
"Hi there!"
A girl with short brown hair and a yellow ribbon in it was in front of my desk. Next to her was a lanky-looking boy with brown hair who said,
"Haruhi, don't bother people at this time of day."
"Be quiet, I'm busy recruiting!"
Recruiting? Some club?
"Here."
She gave me a piece of paper. Apparently it was a flier. I read it. "The S.O.S. Brigade. Saving the world by Overloading it-" What the hell?
"Interested?"
The boy tried to make her back off.
"He isn't. We don't need any more members. Besides, I don't think he'd want to do what we do."
"...What do you guys do?"
"We're just sort of a leisure club. We don't do certain things or anything, it's actually boring. I only joined fo-"
"Kyon! Anyone willing to join should fit right in!"
I wasn't willing to join... What was she talking about? Is she just stupid?
"It's another mysterious transfer student! We should give him a chance!"
"Sigh... But-"
"Kyon, as leader, I'll handle it."
I guess I'll try them out.
"Okay, I gu-"
"-Good! Come with me!"
I was immediately pulled out of my desk. Great. I'm being kidnapped by a possibly mentally inabled girl. What's going to happen now?
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good job, I guess the idea is simliar to my fanfic that I posted above. Although english level is very different from mine.
It's fun to write self insertions, although making them fun to read takes alot.