Never mind the rant, I am just tired because I had been working on the enemies, the plan/time table to do both the male and female story (chronological order).....until 4am in the morning (that post about working on it for four hours is basically this happening in the background) and my family woke me up at 8am for spring cleaning (I just woke up from a nap btw).
@Eratas:
Sorry, Your advice is good but I actually need a bit of Criticism (ensuring Gray stu level stay at certain range) but never mind, new direction is still working out fine.
No restriction fit my style better anyway.
But I would still need help on the story though (this time, not concept or idea but the actual full draft will be prepared
).
Writing report (My own personal analysis on my own story since nobody commented on my story *sigh* I had to do my own self-analysis. Sorry for being a sorry-being who had to comment on his own story.):
Spoiler for Cutted for length:
Problem: There is also a reason why Ignis failed (reworking on the entire story because of this): There is no fire in him.... I can't seems to type out the fire in him.(End up making him Kyon-like)
That is not fire.... Fire should be aggressive and energetic and nothing like Kyon.
To correct this problem: Smile more (my gloomy personality leaked into the story....can't be help, I smile like the joker.....) and run tests on (as in typing scenario and read out loud) on new male lead to see if I can correct the problem.....Also... adding little bit of hot-blooded to bring out the fire (will be doing High Tension project(Angel beat) whenever I am free.... OH YEA!!!! OVERREACTION CAN BE AWESOME! ).
Is it really necessary to change the character again? Not really, the change is more symbolic than necessarily. But it will serve as a reminder to just go ahead with whatever I planned (jump first and look later. PLOT HOLE MEANS NOTHING IF YOU CAN JUMP HIGHER THAN IT.).
What worked out: Fortunately, I felt that Ignis' first chapter's Light novel style is a success. It is less boring than my previous style of writting. So I will be still be using that same style.