@ Papermario
The story is interesting, and does say or allude to a lot with very few words. It's a very efficient piece, the story can be deduced after careful reading. At the same time though, because it's written in this way many details are missing thus it may feel incomplete (basically, the story is interesting enough for me to want more answers).
@ AtomicoX
Good job with the story, the Colonel's internal conflict is well illustrated. It's almost certainly better than my original story, which is the same plot except that mine is told from the pov of the soldiers. Unfortunately for your story I could more or less guess the ending, hence there's not so much of a kick when I finished reading it.
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