Okay. Let's see if this works.
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Author's notes:
I'm going to admit right off the bat, I'm not terrible satisfied with these recent chapters. Lots of good moments in place but I already know I'm going to be seriously overhauling them during the subsequent rewrites.
However, you're getting this for free so you get to see the rough sketches, screw ups, and ideas-that-might-need-a-blowtorch.
The first trick in writing is to WRITE SOMETHING DOWN so you're not staring at blank paper. This chapter needs a lot more connective tissue but there's enough here for release. Astute readers may notice some paragraphs that refer back in time to moments I'm going to deal with in earlier chapters in the redrafting phase.
edit: I'm using the same descriptive words too often ... too much "lunging", for example.