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And now here we go again!
Future Tense
Chapter 25: Extrication, Part 1
In which Nanoha faces an unlikely opponent, and Givo brings a problem to Teana's doorstep...
Previous parts can be found here.
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To be honest I was kinda bored with this chapter. Took me several hours to read it because I kept wandering away to do other things. Isis's appearence just feels out of place, like she doesn't really belong in there. The Teana/Givo stuff was a bit more interesting, but it seems you've overlooked the fact that Teana can turn invisible. I know the one area had an AMF but otherwise she can just use that and not have to worry about being caught. Maybe she'll use it next time.