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Originally Posted by Zaku Hyuga
Quzor: Very Nice! I love the samurai/ninja idea, that'll be cool. And The fight between the leader and that other punk was cool too. May I ask why "Tsubashi" didn't have a samurai sword or is that confidential for now?
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Oh yes, it's confidential for the time being. As a mini-spoiler, I'll just say that some of what was said in the first chapter will turn out to be false later. I don't know how many chapters this is going to take, but hopefully I'll be able to reveal it without taking too long, while still keeping it suspenseful.
As for your new chapter: It was an interesting idea, but I thought it was kind of...well...slow. I didn't quite understand why Zaku would say he started the fight when he didn't, or why he thought he would get in more trouble if he didn't say he did. I also wasn't a particular fan of squad 15 getting 30 days punishment, compared to 15 for the others; it seemed to me like all involved parties should have received equal punishment (there goes my socialist mind again), but maybe that's just me. I did like the end, though (I won't spoil it here). All in all, I guess it wasn't too bad. I would have liked to see more happen, but intense action can't occur in every chapter, lest it become boring (like my stories
).