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Old 2013-03-10, 04:55   Link #781
sasahar17
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Originally Posted by wavehawk View Post
Partial first draft. This was the easy part. The bulk of the story is what's been driving me close to suicide.
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wavehawk's fic
Erm, there really isn't much for me to comment on since I have no context on what's happening. All I can tell is that an Aussie chick has just arrived in England with orders she doesn't understand, then the helicopter that dropped her off leaves, and then a TSF that looks like it just returned from a particularly nasty brush with death shows up. I'd like a little more to go on before I form an opinion.

I can say that what you have so far sets the atmosphere nicely, but without more to go one I have no clue what's going on. Good start though.

EDIT: Decided to add something else in. Here's the next writeup on the next VTF I've been brainstorming about.

Spoiler for ML:DYRL, EF-2002 Dragoon:

I should go away and compile these somewhere...

Last edited by sasahar17; 2013-03-10 at 05:32. Reason: Added worldbuilding snippet
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