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Originally Posted by StratoSpear

Rather quiet here. I have been thinking of an SAO fanfic as of late, haven't really started any chapters but here's the general idea:

Spoiler for :

Sword Art Online: The Red Despair

::Summary::

An AU fic that stars an OC solo player in SAO who seeks adventures but lacks any drive to do so upon reaching Floor 11, in the town of Taft.

Disappointed for being unable to seek out a guild known as Black Cats of the Full Moon which was known to reside within the town, he's soon introduced to a new rumor, one that will give him the drive he needs to embark on a journey he craves for.

As it is now, it appears to lack focus. The Black Cats mention was worth quirking an eyebrow over, but considering this fic seems to be (the OC) character-driven, there's a gaping lack of elaboration on his laziness and why his laziness is suddenly irrelevant.

I think in layman's terms, that translates to: "sounds too generic". I'd advise you to make it more personal if you want to create interest.