[Akashin]

Originally Posted by adorable plum

After watching the last episodes there has been a plot ghosting around my head. What do you think?

Spoiler for Chapter 1 - Last entry into her diary:

Chapter 1 - Last entry into her diary

Small near crystalline droplets were purchasing ground on her cheeks as she opened her battered diary. The last page of it. This far the two of them had never gotten before but still the looming doom above their heads was tearing her up and her tears flowed without hesitation.

12.07.2014

It has been long since I have been able to write something in a calm hour lately. The Incubators were coming closer to find their hiding place. Homura has been calm the last few hours, she probably thinks another end is near once again and preserves her magic energy supply as much as possible. With each cycle the Incubators were becoming aware of us more quickly and respond to us with ever more ferocity. I write this in hope that in this time I may be able to prevent someone else making the same mistake as me, Homura and any other Magical Girl. The Incubators are evil and cruel to mankind playing some kind of important game on the shoulders of us Magical Girls. If you read this please hear my voice and never contract with an Incubator. Nothing good will come of it! Despair will consume you and everyone you love! The story of Homura and me has become obscure after my mistake. My wish that made me a Magical Girl has gone so very wrong... Kyuube deceived me promising my wish could change the entire universe as I was destined to become the strongest Magical Girl in existence but upon wishing that I want to prevent all witches from ever being born, everything went wrong. I was not powerful enough and this wish changed only two people. Homura and me. Suddenly exempt from the system with a different system in place for just the two of us Walpurgis Night was not defeated but we were. Our misery become certain inescapable reality once the Incubators discovered the true nature of my wish. Magical Girls suddenly would not give emotional energy upon converting to witches anymore and would not server any purpose to the ever plotting Incubators anymore. Well it is not entirely true that Magical Girls do not give energy anymore. All but two are like that. Upon death Homura and I have being the most delicious energy snack for Kyuube ever in existence and thus he pursues us never ceasing. If death would be the end however I could rest next to Homura in peace... But life has been torturing us ever since it became impossible for Homura to prevent me from becoming a Magical Girl through my wish. Every time we die, releasing more energy the more prolonged and painful our death is, we are reincarnated immediatly giving the Incubators another new target to chase.
The only that keeps us going is...

The door burst open and a gust of wind startled the two inhabitants as they warily looked up to the open door. Three Magical Girls with mean looking weapons were just outside of their temporary sanctuary grinning and them with unhidden disgust and hate.

"Time to die evil witches!" One of the three shouted.

I'm of two minds here. On one hand the idea is almost unbearably interesting, and it really sounds like something I could sit down and waste hours reading, but on the other hand I'm not sure if the diary-esque style you've given it does it justice. Maybe it's just me but I think a faster paced, in-the-moment sort of writing would suit this idea better; something along the lines of the Darker Than Black OVA, where everything is thrown at you almost randomly and you're left to pick up clues of what the hell is going on as they come.

Plus I had a tough time believing that diary entry was something Madoka would write, but again, that could just be me.