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Old 2008-12-19, 16:08   Link #2958
Yosei
Death by writing
 
Join Date: Jan 2006
Location: Hong Kong/Brisbane
Dialogue is quite good, especially between Re and Galatea. However, the restriction on words continues to be a small problem. Before Jean was injured you used "kill" too many times. A less serious case is where you said isley had left and there was no one left. XD

A fun and suspenseful chapter. Keep it up.
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