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Old 2012-08-22, 17:05   Link #92
Hagoshod
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I tried to rewrite the first couple of paragraphs so we see more of Lisbeth's thought processes and her Kirito babbling at the end of the chapter doesn't seem so wtf out of nowhere.

Is it an improvement? Should I go back to the original version?

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