It came off a bit flashy for my tastes. But it's not nearly as over the top as the karaeoke effects everone is using these days :>
All in all, it was pretty well done. I liked it.
By the way, in case you weren't aware, that same prologue story was printed in the liner notes of ADV's release of Kino volume 1. It's obvious you did you did your own translation though.
I'll be looking forward to seeing more chapters. But as much as I love Kino, Yukikaze is still at the top of my novel translation want list
