Comment on strained
The characters (Lelouch and Shirley) had it going storywise, but there is only so much two characters can do. Because of that, it was alittle strained.
Explanation wise, the story was detailed, The characters were portrayed well enough... The scening couldn't have been perfect (The ending was particuliar fan-food for me. Thank you very much.) though the scenes were perfect, I felt you could've improved on them.
Thats all. Other then that, I don't see the problem....
Just.. you know...When it comes time for Rolo, do the entire fanfiction and favor and perforate him. Thats my only advice.
