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Old 2013-09-20, 01:28   Link #20
Assort Dis
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I think you made good decision on leaving out the skill description. It shows more focus on what's happening in each panel.

Bushido's first appearance with the "Problem?" dialogue is more logical than the first draft. And you added one extra panel in the last page which helps express how the MC getting out of the rubble.

Overall, no complaint here. The draft is easier to read now
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