[Kirito]

The read was definitely worth the wait hats off to you as always "Thumbs up". I literally spent over 25-35 minutes going over all of the scenarios and how each of the characters interacted, reacted, and gave insight of their feelings regarding their own agendas and other choices that could affect not only their lives, but of those around them. You've done a really phenomenal job of doing that.

Part One:

Current Mami x Madoka Route Scenario:

I enjoyed the way you've transitioned the parts of a happy loving couple who love each other deeply to how their relationship could be possibly threatened. In this scenario Madoka is tore between her keeping the promise she with Homura about not becoming a magical girl and staying in a deep loving relationship with Mami. I liked how you captured how Mami is a magical girl who's forced to bear the world on her shoulders and takes her failures (ie. saving Hitomi) pretty hard and responsibilities seriously.Madoka is someone who has to sit on the sidelines praying for the safety of her friends and girlfriend, unless she makes a decision that could end up hurting her friends, the person she made a promise with, and the person she loves. It showed how their relationship progressed over a short period of time and how realistic it feels when we face insecurities regarding the safety and the responsibilities of ours friends and loved ones.

Spoiler for Prime Example:

Mami was thinking of possibly breaking things off with Madoka so that she can resume her magical girl responsibilities. Like Homura to an extent, she seems to hate the idea of Madoka become a magical girl in the last couple of romance chains I've read.

As for Sayaka she's definitely torn between keeping things the same between her and Kamijou or take a risk and give him the happiness he could obtain again. Sayaka's characters strikes me as someone who can't handle heavy burdens or risks pretty well, but despite those flaws she can be strong minded girl as what she has shown in the series.

Spoiler for Prime Example:

During the second choice of when Madoka encourages Sayaka to become a magical girl and she got wish she wanted. Hitomi got in the way of her having a relationship with Kamijou knowing that she liked him first and took the time to be there for him during his depression. Homura warned her about the wish part will only bring misfortune but went with it despite the risk. Like the anime her regrets mixed with the lack of resolve to accept the changed caused her downfall, despite Homura's objections and fair warnings.

Ending Critics:

First Ending:

Spoiler for Verdict:

My heart broke when Mami died especially when her and Madoka were going to get married, and Madoka had to live on despite the pain she and live for her sake as well as Mami's. I know it sounds weird but it really made me sad. Kyoko as the priestess for the wedding, nicely done. You sure pay attention to your Madoka homework

Second Ending:

Spoiler for Verdict:

I really liked it. It shows that there was a way for magical girls to prevent becoming witches in a more "safe" way. Yuri I approve "thumbs up". The way you've written it, in my eyes, was convincing and beautiful. Sayaka's sacrifice was really touching and I'm glad that Mami and Madoka will always together, my favourite pairing in the series Mami x Madoka ftw

I can't wait to see what Mami's idea for Sayaka is. I hope it's going to be something good.

Part Two:

Current Madoka x Sayaka's Route Scenario:

I really like the pace of their current romantic relationship (Sayaka is my second favourite heroine in the series).

Spoiler for Madoka and Sayaka's New Relationship:

During the park scene I found it cute how the two are coming to grips with their new found relationship. It's understandable considering that they've been best friends for years and now they're taking their relationship to the next level, with I'm sure a bit of hint of intimacy. What impressed me is when they were playing together at Sayaka's house, they've consented to take things slow as in contrast to Mami their relationship kind of felt like lust (romance was obviously there though) but as a Mami fan I enjoyed 110% of it because the pairing is awesome, and it's great writing on your part in my opinion. Getting back on topic; I hope that you can keep the "slow" pace of their relationship, plus add the intimate features bit by bit, be a tease, but keep your pace.

Part Three:

Homura and Madoka Affection Act:

Spoiler for Affection Choices:

It's nice to see you've put a more "human" emphasis on Homura ice queen personality. I know in the anime we see more sides to her and I liked how you allowed her to keep her "mask" as the ice princess and the "mask" of a girl who loves/treasures Madoka with her life. Since their relationship is practically canon to the original (I'm sure the Sayaka and Mami counted as well), I definitely enjoy her cryptic interactions with the other girls and I like learning more about her.

Spoiler for Pros:

You've pulled off another winner out of the hat. I enjoyed these scenarios and I have faith that the next segment will be even better. I give you a 9/10 in terms of scenarios, relationship development, length was excellent, and the pace where the girl interacts with each other both positively and negatively

Spoiler for Cons:

Take Sayaka and Madoka's romantic relationship a bit slow, that's all. (All is explained in the Madoka and Sayaka romance column)

Phenomenal work as always and keep going at your own pace. I'll be waiting!!