Your version isn't an add... its spoiler haven...
And it doesn't sound "Bad" 
... it sounds childish 
... witch is even worse 
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Originally Posted by My childish version...
Mai HiME >> High-School-Girls kicking but using demonic powers... saving and destroying the world...
Mai Otome >> Fairy Tell Story... with 20-30 year old Girl-Knights in shiny armour... |
Well... IMO... it should be as simple and as vague as possible... its an add after all... and its best to leave a little (actually a lot of) room for the show
