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Old 2008-02-01, 14:21   Link #41
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Hehe!

I've finished my fourth chapta of Naruto Enru! Hope this keeps you entertained!
I'm sorry I haven't been able to write so much, I got some problems going on with my family and GCSE's approaching so quickly the stress is gunna make me eat my own head

But, I'll try to make the 4th chapter come out reasonably soon!
Chapter 3: Team Rivalry!
http://narutofic.org/viewstory.php?s...ze=0&chapter=4

Rate & review please!
Even if you don't like it, constructive critism is always good to have!
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Old 2008-02-03, 11:59   Link #42
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I've finished my fourth chapta of Naruto Enru! Hope this keeps you entertained!
I'm sorry I haven't been able to write so much, I got some problems going on with my family and GCSE's approaching so quickly the stress is gunna make me eat my own head
I hear you Katoso, GCSE is a big pain in the a*s, but I don't live in England I live in Bermuda
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Old 2008-02-03, 12:44   Link #43
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Sorry!

I was supposed to post this AGES ago on the other thread but I forgot so umm...here.
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Old 2008-02-03, 13:11   Link #44
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Well, I really can't miss such an oppertunity, though I am certainly one of the last people who really have the right to be posting this, seeing as I haven't updated since last April...

Title: Nakama
Summary: an AU, written before the Kakashi Gaiden. The young Kakashi is under the future Fourth Hokage, with his team mates, Obito and Midori. They go through the war together and slowly come to realise the reality of the world they live in.

"Nakama" has a sequel called "Touketsu no Namida", which goes on with Kakashi's ANBU era. You'll find that and a few one-shots in my profile:

Pen-name: LinSetsu

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Old 2008-02-05, 13:13   Link #45
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Hey again, I actually had some spare time on my hands *(big shock)* so i've gone and written up the 4th chapter of Naruto Enru, so her you go.

Chapter 4: Learning the Jutsu!
http://www.narutofic.org/viewstory.p...7213&chapter=5

Hope you enjoy it, please rate and review this, as well as chapter 3, still havent got any comment on that
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Old 2008-02-06, 01:05   Link #46
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A242 - Finally! It's nice to see that you've gotten your story off the ground! Good start so far. I'm especially interested in Tetsuo's adopted daughter. Besides the fact that poison specialists are bad-ass, she gets to externally control only the substance, which is just cool as hell! Keep it coming, I'm looking forward to later chapters.

KL - That was an interesting chapter. In a way, it made me feel like I was reading a Naruto chapter; it moved sort of slowly, and not much happened, but it made me more excited for next chatper. I can't wait to see what surprises Kumagimo Tower holds in store.

Katoso - The rivalry between Katoso and Kanji is developing nicely. It's reminiscent of the Naruto/Sasuke rivalry from very early on in the series. I'm also interested to learn more about the two ninja roaming through the tea country, who I assume are related to Katoso because of their outfits. It'll be interesting to see what those two bring to the table.

I'll try to get actual ratings up for all of you on the TONFA website soon. I've been real lazy about it, which isn't good, since many of you have been nice enough to rate my story there

Edit: Well, I started a new fanfic today. Have a look at the first chapter:

http://narutofic.org/viewstory.php?sid=7521

It probably won't be as long as my first one, but I don't know that for sure. Either way, it will be totally different! Read, rate, enjoy!
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Old 2008-02-06, 09:57   Link #47
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Finally! I got it finished

"Leaf's Squad 15" "Chapter 4 Punishment! 30 Days D-Rank"
http://www.narutofic.org/viewstory.p...ze=0&chapter=4

Please enjoy, and let me know what you think. I'm going to read everyone's new chapter's tonight and I'll review them here and rate them there for you.
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Old 2008-02-06, 22:26   Link #48
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Well I've caught up on everyone but KurayamiLeader's fanfics, he's just got such a large lead on me.

Reith: Nice I like the flash back/memories was a nice change from what all else I've been reading.

Katoso Shunin: The story is coming along very nicely. I laughed at Kanji being fooled by Katoso with the water clones. I also wanted to point out that it's Kekei Genkai not Gekko Genkai, I'm not trying to flame or get on your case just wanted to let you know. I think I figured out how to write our characters together. Later on your village could hire a squad from my village for help since yours is so short on men, and it turns out to be my squad.

Quzor: Very Nice! I love the samurai/ninja idea, that'll be cool. And The fight between the leader and that other punk was cool too. May I ask why "Tsubashi" didn't have a samurai sword or is that confidential for now?

KurayamiLeader: sorry I haven't caught up yet, as soon as I do I'll give you a nice big reveiw.

Let me know what you think of my newest chapter.
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Old 2008-02-07, 02:15   Link #49
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Quzor: Very Nice! I love the samurai/ninja idea, that'll be cool. And The fight between the leader and that other punk was cool too. May I ask why "Tsubashi" didn't have a samurai sword or is that confidential for now?
Oh yes, it's confidential for the time being. As a mini-spoiler, I'll just say that some of what was said in the first chapter will turn out to be false later. I don't know how many chapters this is going to take, but hopefully I'll be able to reveal it without taking too long, while still keeping it suspenseful.

As for your new chapter: It was an interesting idea, but I thought it was kind of...well...slow. I didn't quite understand why Zaku would say he started the fight when he didn't, or why he thought he would get in more trouble if he didn't say he did. I also wasn't a particular fan of squad 15 getting 30 days punishment, compared to 15 for the others; it seemed to me like all involved parties should have received equal punishment (there goes my socialist mind again), but maybe that's just me. I did like the end, though (I won't spoil it here). All in all, I guess it wasn't too bad. I would have liked to see more happen, but intense action can't occur in every chapter, lest it become boring (like my stories ).
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Old 2008-02-07, 02:45   Link #50
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Katoso Shunin: The story is coming along very nicely. I laughed at Kanji being fooled by Katoso with the water clones. I also wanted to point out that it's Kekei Genkai not Gekko Genkai, I'm not trying to flame or get on your case just wanted to let you know. I think I figured out how to write our characters together. Later on your village could hire a squad from my village for help since yours is so short on men, and it turns out to be my squad.
Cheers, I knew I spelt it wrong, but spell checker doesnt help in this circumstance
Ah well, least I know how to say it now, eh?
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Old 2008-02-07, 08:26   Link #51
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Oh yes, it's confidential for the time being. As a mini-spoiler, I'll just say that some of what was said in the first chapter will turn out to be false later. I don't know how many chapters this is going to take, but hopefully I'll be able to reveal it without taking too long, while still keeping it suspenseful.

As for your new chapter: It was an interesting idea, but I thought it was kind of...well...slow. I didn't quite understand why Zaku would say he started the fight when he didn't, or why he thought he would get in more trouble if he didn't say he did. I also wasn't a particular fan of squad 15 getting 30 days punishment, compared to 15 for the others; it seemed to me like all involved parties should have received equal punishment (there goes my socialist mind again), but maybe that's just me. I did like the end, though (I won't spoil it here). All in all, I guess it wasn't too bad. I would have liked to see more happen, but intense action can't occur in every chapter, lest it become boring (like my stories ).
What I was thinking about Zaku was that he was afraid to argue with Hokoro and go back and forth with Hokoro saying the other one started it, acting like little kids, that would probably make the Hokage mad, and if you get a kind of idea of Hokoro's personality he's not going to admit it was him. So I had the feeling that Zaku thought if they did that that and didn't just say it, he would get his whole team in bigger trouble; don't worry though, if you notice I dropped a couple hints that the Hokage knows the truth, it'll all work out. And sorry about no fight this time, i know that with my writing style that if I do a fight every time it will get repetetive, like you said. The story will pick up pretty quickly though P.S. can't wait for more of yours.
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Old 2008-02-07, 18:26   Link #52
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Here's another new story from me!

The Super Squad 7
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4058959/1/The_Super_Squad_7

I know I havn't finished the others. I'm going to focus on The Leaf Village Life and The Continued Legacy after I finish by short M-rated three-shot tonite.
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Old 2008-02-09, 11:50   Link #53
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Hey , I've done yet another chapter, for you to read, review, or rant about if it needs improvement:

Chapter 5: New Mission!
http://narutofic.org/viewstory.php?s...ze=0&chapter=6

Sorry the chapters are released on wavy dates, but my life hasnt been so on track at the moment.. ah well
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Old 2008-02-09, 13:32   Link #54
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http://narutofic.org/viewstory.php?s...ze=0&chapter=2

It's done. Chapter two of "The Devil's Offspring" has finally been completed, ahead of schedule no less.

My brain is a little...well...I don't really know how to feel about this chapter. I like it, but I think I could like it more, I don't know. Read it and tell me what you think
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Old 2008-02-09, 23:59   Link #55
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Hey , I've done yet another chapter, for you to read, review, or rant about if it needs improvement:

Chapter 5: New Mission!
http://narutofic.org/viewstory.php?s...ze=0&chapter=6

Sorry the chapters are released on wavy dates, but my life hasnt been so on track at the moment.. ah well
I liked it. I'm very interested to read about what happens during the mission. Slaughtering a whole village is no easy task (we've seen people fail a couple of times), so I'm very interested to see what information the squad can gather about the occurrence.

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Okay I know it's been forever but here is chapter 36 of the Flashback Exams Arc. Mikko and company face illusions and what-not as they scale the obsurd and scary Kumagimo Pagoda.

Chapter #36 "Genin Round-up: The Preliminaries begin!"
http://www.narutofic.org/stories.php...r&chapid=26504
Yay, fights! Man, I've been waiting for this part of the story since, well, forever! So many cool characters with so many cool techniques. This is going to be the tits, for sure!
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Old 2008-02-10, 15:21   Link #56
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Okay Here's chapter #37: "A Heated Rivalry Begins: Mikko Vs Akira!"
http://www.narutofic.org/viewstory.p...361&chapter=37

Basically the preliminaries have begun and now Mikko is first up to bat, but she has to fight a nonchalant, and somewhat arrogant boy named Akira. Who will prevail and whose dreams will end there at the Kumagimo Pagoda?
I must admit, I was very enthralled by all of this chapter, right up to the end.
Spoiler for chapter 37:
It was a good chapter, I just didn't want it to end that way.
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Old 2008-02-10, 18:09   Link #57
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Well, I didn't think I'd do it today, but Adediran convinced me to put some time in. So here it is, the Third Chapter of "The Devil's Offspring."

http://narutofic.org/viewstory.php?s...ze=0&chapter=3

It's a bit longer than the other chapters, but I hope you enjoy it. Feel free to review it there, and give some feedback here...it would be greatly appreciated
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Old 2008-02-11, 17:44   Link #58
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Thx for letting me know about the thread Quzor. Checl out my new sig. Is real kewl.
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Old 2008-02-11, 19:15   Link #59
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Okay Here's chapter #37: "A Heated Rivalry Begins: Mikko Vs Akira!"
http://www.narutofic.org/viewstory.p...361&chapter=37

Basically the preliminaries have begun and now Mikko is first up to bat, but she has to fight a nonchalant, and somewhat arrogant boy named Akira. Who will prevail and whose dreams will end there at the Kumagimo Pagoda?
Very nice, I really liked this latest chapter. Well written and a really enjoyable read.

I'm atill working on mine, though I kinda have put it on hold due to schoolwork and the fact that I'm lacking inspiration at the moment. I don't really like how my chapter is being written so far, so when I DO get a chance to work on it, it's getting changed continuously. I can't say when I'll have it done, but know that it's being whittled-away-at. Or so to speak.
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Old 2008-02-11, 19:48   Link #60
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Very nice, I really liked this latest chapter. Well written and a really enjoyable read.

I'm atill working on mine, though I kinda have put it on hold due to schoolwork and the fact that I'm lacking inspiration at the moment. I don't really like how my chapter is being written so far, so when I DO get a chance to work on it, it's getting changed continuously. I can't say when I'll have it done, but know that it's being whittled-away-at. Or so to speak.
Thanks for the positive feedback Insanity I've been gradually getting over my SW cravings but not fully I still have some lightsaber quirks that need working out before I can finally breath and be at one with the force...uh I mean chakra or something
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