Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[Kazu-kun]

Originally Posted by Estavali

A, please.
Not really. IIRC Hayate does have the habit of addressing people with -chan the moment she gets to know them, and Shamal is pretty much the same too.

Yeah, of course, but.... that wasn't the point. What I mean is that it's no like Nanoha to go around wondering why people call her that way when she herself has the same habit.

[Estavali]

Originally Posted by Kazu-kun

Yeah, of course, but.... that wasn't the point. What I mean is that it's no like Nanoha to go around wondering why people call her that way when she herself has the same habit.

Ah, I see. My bad.

[Kagerou]

Voting A. Nothing like a stroll around town and see the sights.

And probably make a few other characters show up as well.

[SpaceBrotha]

B Let's go check who's at the park

[ghazghkull]

B!!!! a walk down the park sounds good ^^

[Sam the Onion]

B sounds the most interesting. I'll go with that.

[Kha]

Keroko, you actually managed to drag me out of FF-Lurker mode to read this:

Originally Posted by Keroko

Spoiler for Raising Heart:

I decided not to decline Hayate’s offer to lead me around, and waited for her to finish packing her last things. Interrogating Fate would have to wait.

“So, where should we go first?” Hayate asked as she placed the bag on her back, and reached for her crutches.

“Uhm…” I paused for a moment. Why are you asking me? “Well, you mentioned the cafeteria, so let’s start there.”

The tour through the school was very interesting. Though we had a little bit of trouble moving up and down stairways with Hayate’s crutches, we managed to get through the entire school. Hayate showed me the cafeteria, the locations of various classrooms, and the different clubs.

“So, Nanoha-chan, have you thought about joining a club yet?” Hayate asked me.

“No, not really. I’ve been to busy with the transfer to think about such things.”

“I can imagine” Hayate said with a nod. “So what are your interests? A sports club maybe?”

“Ahh…” I sweatdropped. “No, I’m quite clumsy when it comes to sports, so I don’t think I’ll join a sports club any time soon.”

“Really? That’s not something I would say when I look at you. Hmm.” Hayate said as she cupped her chin and started looking at me up and down, as if analysing me.

It made me kinda nervous.

“Err… So Hayate, what kind of clubs are you member of?” I asked. Anything to get her to stop staring at me like that.

“Me?” As if someone had pushed a button, Hayate’s entire body changed. The analysing look disappeared and she straightened up, a glitter appearing in her eyes. “I’m part of the cooking club. We practice various methods of cooking, experiment and try to find new recipes, sometimes we help prepare the food for the cafeteria too. Interested in joining?”

I thought about it. I did enjoy cooking, but on the other hand it might be fun to explore other things for a change. Deciding to answer her honestly, I told her I’d think about it.

“Hayate-chan!” A new voice could be heard from behind us. I turned around to see a light blonde haired woman walk up to us. She was wearing a medical coat and looked a bit disturbed.

“Mou, I have been looking all over for you. Signum is already here to pick us up, what were you doing all this time?”

All this time? A quick check on my watch made my eyes widen in surprise. It was already 17:00! The tour through the school had taken up more time then I realized!

“I’m sorry Shamal, I was just showing Nanoha-chan around, she transferred here today you see.”

“Ara?” It was only now that Shamal seemed to take notice of me. “Oh my! I’m sorry, I didn’t know Hayate-chan was showing you around. My name is Shamal, I am the school medic. If you ever get hurt in the school, come and see me immediately.”

She smiled a kind smile, one that puts you at ease by just looking at it, it really suited her. I couldn’t help but smile back.

“I’m Takamachi Nanoha, pleased to meet you. I’m sorry for the trouble I caused…”

“Oh no, no. It’s no problem at all. Hayate-chan, I’ll go tell Signum to wait for a little while longer. How much have you shown Nanoha-chan yet?”

…Again already calling me Nanoha-chan? It seems to run in the family.

“Actually, we just finished the last few spots. And it is getting late, so we should get going if I want to be able to make dinner.” Hayate said as she checked her own watch.

“Then I’ll be leaving. Thanks for the tour Hayate, I really enjoyed it.” I thanked Hayate, and bowed to Shamal-sensei.

“You’re welcome, Nanoha-chan. And remember to come over to my place one of these days.” Hayate called after me.

I smiled and nodded before heading my own way. My first day at school and I already made a friend, how much better could this day get? I checked my watch. 17:08 on a nice summer evening, my room is very close, so I could go out into town before the stores close. Or I could just call it a day.

A: I’m going into town; I’m curious what shops are around here.

B: Hayate-chan told me there was a park close by, maybe I could take a little stroll to look around.

C: I’m tired, its been a long day. Let’s just head back to my room.

...and vote:

B

Because I like parks...

..uh okay the other me who lives here and isn't a MMO NEET likes parks. :3

[PhoenixG]

Originally Posted by Keroko

Spoiler for Raising Heart:

I decided not to decline Hayate’s offer to lead me around, and waited for her to finish packing her last things. Interrogating Fate would have to wait.

“So, where should we go first?” Hayate asked as she placed the bag on her back, and reached for her crutches.

“Uhm…” I paused for a moment. Why are you asking me? “Well, you mentioned the cafeteria, so let’s start there.”

The tour through the school was very interesting. Though we had a little bit of trouble moving up and down stairways with Hayate’s crutches, we managed to get through the entire school. Hayate showed me the cafeteria, the locations of various classrooms, and the different clubs.

“So, Nanoha-chan, have you thought about joining a club yet?” Hayate asked me.

“No, not really. I’ve been to busy with the transfer to think about such things.”

“I can imagine” Hayate said with a nod. “So what are your interests? A sports club maybe?”

“Ahh…” I sweatdropped. “No, I’m quite clumsy when it comes to sports, so I don’t think I’ll join a sports club any time soon.”

“Really? That’s not something I would say when I look at you. Hmm.” Hayate said as she cupped her chin and started looking at me up and down, as if analysing me.

It made me kinda nervous.

“Err… So Hayate, what kind of clubs are you member of?” I asked. Anything to get her to stop staring at me like that.

“Me?” As if someone had pushed a button, Hayate’s entire body changed. The analysing look disappeared and she straightened up, a glitter appearing in her eyes. “I’m part of the cooking club. We practice various methods of cooking, experiment and try to find new recipes, sometimes we help prepare the food for the cafeteria too. Interested in joining?”

I thought about it. I did enjoy cooking, but on the other hand it might be fun to explore other things for a change. Deciding to answer her honestly, I told her I’d think about it.

“Hayate-chan!” A new voice could be heard from behind us. I turned around to see a light blonde haired woman walk up to us. She was wearing a medical coat and looked a bit disturbed.

“Mou, I have been looking all over for you. Signum is already here to pick us up, what were you doing all this time?”

All this time? A quick check on my watch made my eyes widen in surprise. It was already 17:00! The tour through the school had taken up more time then I realized!

“I’m sorry Shamal, I was just showing Nanoha-chan around, she transferred here today you see.”

“Ara?” It was only now that Shamal seemed to take notice of me. “Oh my! I’m sorry, I didn’t know Hayate-chan was showing you around. My name is Shamal, I am the school medic. If you ever get hurt in the school, come and see me immediately.”

She smiled a kind smile, one that puts you at ease by just looking at it, it really suited her. I couldn’t help but smile back.

“I’m Takamachi Nanoha, pleased to meet you. I’m sorry for the trouble I caused…”

“Oh no, no. It’s no problem at all. Hayate-chan, I’ll go tell Signum to wait for a little while longer. How much have you shown Nanoha-chan yet?”

…Again already calling me Nanoha-chan? It seems to run in the family.

“Actually, we just finished the last few spots. And it is getting late, so we should get going if I want to be able to make dinner.” Hayate said as she checked her own watch.

“Then I’ll be leaving. Thanks for the tour Hayate, I really enjoyed it.” I thanked Hayate, and bowed to Shamal-sensei.

“You’re welcome, Nanoha-chan. And remember to come over to my place one of these days.” Hayate called after me.

I smiled and nodded before heading my own way. My first day at school and I already made a friend, how much better could this day get? I checked my watch. 17:08 on a nice summer evening, my room is very close, so I could go out into town before the stores close. Or I could just call it a day.

A: I’m going into town; I’m curious what shops are around here.

B: Hayate-chan told me there was a park close by, maybe I could take a little stroll to look around.

C: I’m tired, its been a long day. Let’s just head back to my room.

B

A stroll in the park should be relaxing....

[LoweGear]

After much deliberation on which choice to pick...

B

Who knows what might happen

[Gillian]

Originally Posted by Keroko

Spoiler for Raising Heart:

I decided not to decline Hayate’s offer to lead me around, and waited for her to finish packing her last things. Interrogating Fate would have to wait.

“So, where should we go first?” Hayate asked as she placed the bag on her back, and reached for her crutches.

“Uhm…” I paused for a moment. Why are you asking me? “Well, you mentioned the cafeteria, so let’s start there.”

The tour through the school was very interesting. Though we had a little bit of trouble moving up and down stairways with Hayate’s crutches, we managed to get through the entire school. Hayate showed me the cafeteria, the locations of various classrooms, and the different clubs.

“So, Nanoha-chan, have you thought about joining a club yet?” Hayate asked me.

“No, not really. I’ve been to busy with the transfer to think about such things.”

“I can imagine” Hayate said with a nod. “So what are your interests? A sports club maybe?”

“Ahh…” I sweatdropped. “No, I’m quite clumsy when it comes to sports, so I don’t think I’ll join a sports club any time soon.”

“Really? That’s not something I would say when I look at you. Hmm.” Hayate said as she cupped her chin and started looking at me up and down, as if analysing me.

It made me kinda nervous.

“Err… So Hayate, what kind of clubs are you member of?” I asked. Anything to get her to stop staring at me like that.

“Me?” As if someone had pushed a button, Hayate’s entire body changed. The analysing look disappeared and she straightened up, a glitter appearing in her eyes. “I’m part of the cooking club. We practice various methods of cooking, experiment and try to find new recipes, sometimes we help prepare the food for the cafeteria too. Interested in joining?”

I thought about it. I did enjoy cooking, but on the other hand it might be fun to explore other things for a change. Deciding to answer her honestly, I told her I’d think about it.

“Hayate-chan!” A new voice could be heard from behind us. I turned around to see a light blonde haired woman walk up to us. She was wearing a medical coat and looked a bit disturbed.

“Mou, I have been looking all over for you. Signum is already here to pick us up, what were you doing all this time?”

All this time? A quick check on my watch made my eyes widen in surprise. It was already 17:00! The tour through the school had taken up more time then I realized!

“I’m sorry Shamal, I was just showing Nanoha-chan around, she transferred here today you see.”

“Ara?” It was only now that Shamal seemed to take notice of me. “Oh my! I’m sorry, I didn’t know Hayate-chan was showing you around. My name is Shamal, I am the school medic. If you ever get hurt in the school, come and see me immediately.”

She smiled a kind smile, one that puts you at ease by just looking at it, it really suited her. I couldn’t help but smile back.

“I’m Takamachi Nanoha, pleased to meet you. I’m sorry for the trouble I caused…”

“Oh no, no. It’s no problem at all. Hayate-chan, I’ll go tell Signum to wait for a little while longer. How much have you shown Nanoha-chan yet?”

…Again already calling me Nanoha-chan? It seems to run in the family.

“Actually, we just finished the last few spots. And it is getting late, so we should get going if I want to be able to make dinner.” Hayate said as she checked her own watch.

“Then I’ll be leaving. Thanks for the tour Hayate, I really enjoyed it.” I thanked Hayate, and bowed to Shamal-sensei.

“You’re welcome, Nanoha-chan. And remember to come over to my place one of these days.” Hayate called after me.

I smiled and nodded before heading my own way. My first day at school and I already made a friend, how much better could this day get? I checked my watch. 17:08 on a nice summer evening, my room is very close, so I could go out into town before the stores close. Or I could just call it a day.

A: I’m going into town; I’m curious what shops are around here.

B: Hayate-chan told me there was a park close by, maybe I could take a little stroll to look around.

C: I’m tired, its been a long day. Let’s just head back to my room.

A
maybe Lindy there


@krisslanza
when show you Nanoha to start a rescue mission

[Keroko]

Originally Posted by Kazu-kun

Also, this "already calling me Nanoha-chan" seems totally OOC to me, as Nanoha is always the first one to call everybody that way. This is one of her most prominent characteristics actually.

When she was 9 year old, yes. You'll notice that by the time of StrikerS, she no longer does this, and only calls those she already knows still with '-chan' Even Shari, whom she met shortly after the end of A's, is called Shari instead of Shari-chan. I left it in for Hayate as a bit of a character trait, while I'm not going to make her the 'sekuhara Hayate' she is often portrayed as in fanart, she is more easy going in that regard.

[PhoenixG]

I don't think Shari is a good example. Shari is a nickname and she wants to be called that way. Carim or Schach was a better example.

[Keroko]

Nickname or not, Nanoha still did not atach -chan to it, which was my point. Heck, even Vivio did not get a -chan suffix.

[PhoenixG]

BTW the first thing I thought when I read "already calling me Nanoha-chan" that
Nanoha expect to be called Takamachi(-chan/-san) or Nanoha-san.
Calling someone first name without suffix the first time you meet is plain rude (in Japan, that is).

[Keroko]

That was actually Actually what I was implying.

[Yaya-chan]

Let's see what Nanoha can achieve.
B desu yo!

[Junkedcat]

Originally Posted by Keroko

Spoiler for Raising Heart:

I decided not to decline Hayate’s offer to lead me around, and waited for her to finish packing her last things. Interrogating Fate would have to wait.

“So, where should we go first?” Hayate asked as she placed the bag on her back, and reached for her crutches.

“Uhm…” I paused for a moment. Why are you asking me? “Well, you mentioned the cafeteria, so let’s start there.”

The tour through the school was very interesting. Though we had a little bit of trouble moving up and down stairways with Hayate’s crutches, we managed to get through the entire school. Hayate showed me the cafeteria, the locations of various classrooms, and the different clubs.

“So, Nanoha-chan, have you thought about joining a club yet?” Hayate asked me.

“No, not really. I’ve been to busy with the transfer to think about such things.”

“I can imagine” Hayate said with a nod. “So what are your interests? A sports club maybe?”

“Ahh…” I sweatdropped. “No, I’m quite clumsy when it comes to sports, so I don’t think I’ll join a sports club any time soon.”

“Really? That’s not something I would say when I look at you. Hmm.” Hayate said as she cupped her chin and started looking at me up and down, as if analysing me.

It made me kinda nervous.

“Err… So Hayate, what kind of clubs are you member of?” I asked. Anything to get her to stop staring at me like that.

“Me?” As if someone had pushed a button, Hayate’s entire body changed. The analysing look disappeared and she straightened up, a glitter appearing in her eyes. “I’m part of the cooking club. We practice various methods of cooking, experiment and try to find new recipes, sometimes we help prepare the food for the cafeteria too. Interested in joining?”

I thought about it. I did enjoy cooking, but on the other hand it might be fun to explore other things for a change. Deciding to answer her honestly, I told her I’d think about it.

“Hayate-chan!” A new voice could be heard from behind us. I turned around to see a light blonde haired woman walk up to us. She was wearing a medical coat and looked a bit disturbed.

“Mou, I have been looking all over for you. Signum is already here to pick us up, what were you doing all this time?”

All this time? A quick check on my watch made my eyes widen in surprise. It was already 17:00! The tour through the school had taken up more time then I realized!

“I’m sorry Shamal, I was just showing Nanoha-chan around, she transferred here today you see.”

“Ara?” It was only now that Shamal seemed to take notice of me. “Oh my! I’m sorry, I didn’t know Hayate-chan was showing you around. My name is Shamal, I am the school medic. If you ever get hurt in the school, come and see me immediately.”

She smiled a kind smile, one that puts you at ease by just looking at it, it really suited her. I couldn’t help but smile back.

“I’m Takamachi Nanoha, pleased to meet you. I’m sorry for the trouble I caused…”

“Oh no, no. It’s no problem at all. Hayate-chan, I’ll go tell Signum to wait for a little while longer. How much have you shown Nanoha-chan yet?”

…Again already calling me Nanoha-chan? It seems to run in the family.

“Actually, we just finished the last few spots. And it is getting late, so we should get going if I want to be able to make dinner.” Hayate said as she checked her own watch.

“Then I’ll be leaving. Thanks for the tour Hayate, I really enjoyed it.” I thanked Hayate, and bowed to Shamal-sensei.

“You’re welcome, Nanoha-chan. And remember to come over to my place one of these days.” Hayate called after me.

I smiled and nodded before heading my own way. My first day at school and I already made a friend, how much better could this day get? I checked my watch. 17:08 on a nice summer evening, my room is very close, so I could go out into town before the stores close. Or I could just call it a day.

A: I’m going into town; I’m curious what shops are around here.

B: Hayate-chan told me there was a park close by, maybe I could take a little stroll to look around.

C: I’m tired, its been a long day. Let’s just head back to my room.

It's not late so a stroll anywhere would be fine, but ill have to go with B . Don't wana see Nanoha get lost in a sea of people just yet.

[Satashi]

Keroko is bringing even more people out of the woodwork lol.

As for the honorific thing, I don't see anything wrong with Nanoha not using it anymore, but her pondering about being called-chan came off to me as her thinking it playfully and not seriously. So I like it.

If you think it's bad seeing this many people comment on honorifics, you shoulda seen what I got when Yuuno called Candy "Candy-kun"

[Kimmie-chan]

Lalala ~

Raising Heart

Park = Swings right?

Then B it is

[Krinen]

Are, Are. So many B's. Though I'll just have to add to them, won't I? =3