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Old 2008-05-26, 19:32   Link #341
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You assumed that an aging officer has near perfect intelligence? Oh wow.
I thought that they'd had several weeks to research the thing and figure out what made it tick, which is where they would've learned what the Wolkenritter were. Kero pointed out that they never actually got around to researching it on their last capture attempt, which punched a nice big hole in my theory. Now quit acting so goddamn superior. I made a mistake.... again.
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Old 2008-05-26, 20:12   Link #342
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This, however, I have trouble believing.

The Bureau has displayed extensive knowledge of the Tome's inner workings, most likely due to a combination of research and intelligence gained from previous awakenings. Chrono displays knowledge of the origins of the Wolkenritter, accurately describing the Guardian Knight system, and the TSAB actually knows more about the Tome's history than the Wolks themselves do. The latter could be learned either through first-hand experience or through a trip to the Infinity Library, but knowledge of the former would require an in-depth examination of the Tome's contents and systems, which would in all likelihood reveal the presence of Reinforce and the corrupted defense program.

Further, Gil and the Lieze twins display an even more thorough knowledge of the Tome's systems when they essentially mind-rape Hayate and send her plunging into despair. The twins seemed to know exactly what to do to force the Book's awakening, not only subjecting Hayate to psychological torture through the erasure of Vita right in front of her, but also taking the forms of the only two people who could possibly have talked her down from using the Book, thus ensuring that Reinforce's wrath would be focused on the only two people left who could possibly get through to Hayate in her transformed state.

With this in mind, from my perspective Gil has far too much information to not know that Hayate could be saved, yet not only does he not even try to save her, he and his familiars utilize brutal tactics to ensure that everything plays out exactly as he wants it to, right up until the point where Chrono unmasked the twins. Durandal was most likely a contingency plan in case things went awry, which they did.

Gil never had any intention of "sealing Hayate away"; he most likely wanted the Book's power for himself. The only questions are how would he get it once the Book was awake, and what did he ultimately intend to do with that power.
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Vaporwared?

Though if WAR manages to hit a good spot with me and my friends, the chances of getting to Northrend become smaller.
I was talking about PF and him being frozen at Northrend.

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set realmlist eu.logon.worldofwarcraft.com
set patchlist eu.version.worldofwarcraft.com


Like you said. Though its more of a level and friend issue for me.
Ah yeah, quite true. Even within the US/Oceanic servers, it's quite difficult to leave my main server and level at another place, even though Horde is being a total bitch on this crowded server.

I want to PvP, but let me finish my dailies first! I need me epic flying mount! If you want to PvP so much, I'll come back and gank you nubs if you like!

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Keroko is a 'skifter', though they are also known as 'dimension travelers' 'eternal warriors' 'world shifters' or whatever term the particular world has for them, if any. Skifters are a natural defence mechanism of the multiverse whenever an inbalance appears. Skifters are send to fix that inbalance, be it through good or evil. Whenever a skifter dies, they are send to the next world.

Okay, so this is not always true, its an excuse I sometimes use to explain to the other members of the world why Keroko has powers that shouldn't appear in that world (if she has them) the discovery of Nanoha gave me a new excuse, which I happilly abuse when inserting Keroko into the Negima storyline.
...

A'dal: ...it is as we calculated. This being is a self evident manifestion of the materium.

Xes'a: Absolute chaos is directing her, and yet she is inline with our cause.

Mirii: Is it by random chance, given the absolute chaos?

Kaa: The difference is too significant to ignore.

Xes'a: What do you suggest?

A'dal: Obeservation.
Kaa: Intervention.

Other Naaru: ...

Mirii: You are always interfering, Kaa.

A'dal: But again, Kaa has a point. Her existence is as limited as our Ces'rauva, a significant reason to intervene, at the same time it makes possible for the Ces'rauva to watch and guide this being's destiny. Not mention this being might illuminate the possibility of a Quera's direction.

Mirii: But that's impossible!

Xes'a: It's just statistically insignificant. This settles it then.

Mirii: I agree on that data point as well, but I emphasize caution. Going out on a limb created Kluize, and in one percentage of the timelines created by this decision, Neltharion will interfere with our work.

Kaa: I will ensure this probability stays as it is.

The songs of the crystalline beings brighten as their plan began unfolding from the past to the future.

Kaa: ...keikakudoori...

Mirii: What was that, Kaa?

Kaa: Nothing.

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Okay the last bit was Khrack... But what you've said matches perfectly the concept of Absolute Chaos, and yet still works like the Naaru's (actually Kaa's) Ces'rauva. Hence the interest, as it is possible that unbeknownst to them all, one of the Quera may be directing her.

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O_o If you're importing the FMP Keroko, then I hope you are looking for some fights, because like I said, she is war-hungry. To keep a long story short: She is the direct oposite of a whispered, she has no knowledge of black technology, but her physical capabillities are through the roof. Unfortunately that comes with an insatiable hunger to use that power, but since she is somewhat willing to listen to Tessa and Mao (because they're woman in command) Mithrill manages to guide her physical ferocity for a good cause.
Roger.

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Let's hope one of them is a diplomat then.
One's a doctor, so diplomat? Check.

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So is Nanoha:

Fate: It's black, sleek and doesn't jam!
Hayate: Just look the firepower of the device!
Keroko: Oooh hi-techies~! Me want~~!
Nanoha: Sorry, Keroko-chan. I'm testing it first!
Keroko: Hidoi-yo, Nanoha-chaaan~ T_T

Kha: 0_0\\\

Raising Heart: [Didn't you know, Master Kha?]
Bardiche: [Yes, Sir.]
Rein Zwei: Hayate's always loved lots of big explosions desu~~
Artherion: [So eat your heart out, Meatbag.]

Kha: The fact that they are all young ladies makes it very disturbing. <.<

(Note: this is set in the loli-shouta era of the Nanoha timeline)

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Ok, this is the first time I've written something like this and I even don't know if I've done it right or not.
Also, since english isn't my native language there is a big possibility for grammatical errors. Please bear with me.
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I'm planning on doing some fan-fic too, centering this character.

Advice of what could be better, history errors, grammatical errors, impossibilites etc. is very appreciated.

Oh, and the picture of Barret, I made in PS very quick. It's so bad it's laughable.

EDIT: Fixed a lot of errors.
I spy, with my little eye, another Johansen who's a sniper. Is he related to the Belka Gunslingers Girls (USB's creations) by any chance?

Looks good, but a 90kg, 180cm male is actually overweight... So I imagined a fatty in my mind...

Notices the whole thread going jii~~~

What? I've learned how to calculate BMI on the fly in my course.

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First, Kero, explain to me why Gil didn't approach Hayate as soon as he knew she had the book.

We don't know anything about the book's previous meisters save for the fact that the Wolks vaguely recall that Hayate treats them unlike any of their previous masters. With this in mind, it's highly likely that every master of the Tome prior to Hayate tried to complete it using the Wolkenritter to gather power from LCs. This time, however, the bureau has the opportunity to gain the cooperation of the book's meister and possibly debug it (keep in mind that the bureau doesn't know the book can't be debugged prior to activation). So long as there was a 1% chance of saving Hayate--and obviously there was--any good honest man would do everything in his power to save her.

But what does Gil do? "Oh well, poor girl's picked up the Tome, too bad for her. We'll just ignore all chances of gaining her cooperation and fixing the damn thing and sentence her to an eternal Deep Freeze once she hits 11 or so. But hey, at least she'll be happy with her new family for the one pathetic year she has left before we mind-rape her and stick her in the fridge!"

How anybody in the entire fandom could possibly mistake Gil for one of the good guys is entirely beyond me. And of course the Tome is too tempting a target for the real Big Bad of the season to keep his hands off, so of course Gil's trying to claim its' power for himself. He's just smart enough to have a convincing cover story ready when Chrono busts his operation, then gets the mages to clean up his own mess for him while he retires in comfort instead of being executed like he should have been.
The thing is, each time its a disaster. I believe Gil became almost a specialist at the Tome after dealing with it repeatedly throughout his career. However, he doesn't feel remorse because we know that most previous owners were reckless villains asking to be taken down. Hayate was someone he knew and trusted possibly because he knew her parents/foster parents, and yet the Book chose her.

But this is theorycrafting, and granted you are arguing against a Gil Graham fanclub here created by Nighty's awesome... So I believe you can find some holes in our views as we can find in your's. But I have to judge that many points in canon run against you there...

But thanks for the heads up. Once I gather my points together I should be able to explain all in A's Destiny. :3

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I don’t get why it would even an issue if all of them even exist that basiclly proves that “many worlds” is in effect and thus them meeting wouldn’t do anything besides cause some confusion.
I was poking fun at the crazy B-grade sci-fi premise that the meeting of same persons from different times will destory teh world.

The actual document made something very romantic out of it... As Fate and Hayate had already passed on, and the Takamachi sisters are slowly giving out due to the magical strain they've picked up over the years, Kha is struggling to find reason to remain among the living when it seems that the world no longer needed him...

...until he finds a young Keroko duking it out in the Layer against his daughter Teresa that in his grief he had forgotten...

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Badly inspired by CLANNAD no less.

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Extra...in other words, sketches >_<

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I did mention that Asclei transforms whenever he needs to spy on others and gather informatin...right? Anyway, Lanos and the others didn't know about what form Asclei transforms into. However, Fate later found out about it.

Here's a sketch of Fate's expression when she realized that the person before her is...well...you can pretty much tell XD.

Spoiler for eeeeeeeeh?!!!!!!!!!!!:
Asclei's profile looks good.

And an absolutely divine moe doujin you got there! What's with those candy? Did Caro make them?

And Asclei's other self makes me think about an old Ranma joke I pulled before.
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Old 2008-05-26, 20:32   Link #343
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No, Alfred bought it somewhere in the neighboring Kingdoms that he visited since Lanos wanted some of it XD. Those candy have magical properties in it where it will give a person either a tail or an ear of a certain animal (randomly) . You could say the candy was made for kids who would like to have fun while eating it. Its like one of those ice cream in japan that leaves a certain color in the tongue when its eaten.

Oh, I forgot to include the history of Asclei...oh well, I'll just add it on the same post later.
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Old 2008-05-26, 20:58   Link #344
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Ah I see. Yes real cool analogy you got there. :3

And your avatar + siggy set is very nice... and very distracting. <.<

And the line in your siggy is even worse... Must... not... think... evil... thoughts... >.>
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Old 2008-05-26, 21:02   Link #345
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*takes out a BIG hammer and whacks Kha into the ground.*

COLOR WOLF TENDENCY KINSHI!!!
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Old 2008-05-26, 21:03   Link #346
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Heeeeeeeeeeeeeeh?!
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Old 2008-05-26, 21:04   Link #347
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*Sighs*

Oh boy...I decide to take a few days off AS and this is what I get. A bunch of backlog I'll have to wade through later.

I'll do that tomorrow when I'm at work and nothing at home can really distract me XD
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*wanders back after the last day of Fanime 2008 dead tired and drained*

Time to do a

WEEKEND

BACKLOG

BBBRRREEEEAAAKKKKEERRRRRRRR!!!!!!

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Comartemis is gonna be angry. Meh, i don't care.

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*hands LE transformation serum before blasting off*
o.O

*RUNS FASTER*

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Yummy~~
Deshou?

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You thought I couldn't do it. Then again...neither did I.


I have overcome my doubts, transcended my fears...and I have achieved what once seemed impossible...

Now prepare for...


BACKLOG........................................... ....................BREAKER.
You are starting to learn the ways of the OC

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Mahou Shoujo SADISTIC Nanoha???
Scary, isn't it?

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Rein Eins. As Infected Rein Eins. As Omega's bride.

Oh and we were going to turn everyone into Tang.

Oh and Franz was supposed to have reached garlock too :P


Mmm...Tang

*RUNS*

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And also, giant mecha. Lots of giant mecha.
Nothing wrong with mecha

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After a girl makes both sides listen to her song and forge an unstable peace.

Before the Dark Portal opens once again...

*runs from Macross and WoW veterans*
*facepalms*

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Not just faster, but THREE TIMES FASTER!!!


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Fate has grown awfully daring indeed, no wonder even Kha’s kinda lightened up a lot more… Now to see if she finally accepts that whipping turns her on… >.>
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KKKKKHHHHHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Try telling that to the Cleric-Knights…


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"YOU ARE NOT PREPARED!!!"

~ Illidan, Last Words. :3


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WHAT IS THIS?!?!?!?!?!?!?

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oO

I swear you did! Now give me my set of Azzinoth!!!

*shakes illidan182 vigorously, waiting for Warblades to drop.*


*hands Kha a knife*

maybe it's inside somewhere...

*RUNS*

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How about her Blaster Bits taking the form of mechanical dragon whelps?
....

Why not mechanical squirrels?

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Tesla: Did you install the disruptor?

Grunt: Yes ma'm.

Tesla: Good.



Tesla: One step ahead, you said?
Well don't that just suck

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Standart Dota procedure. At the first few levels, you stay behind the creeps, close enough to get experience and gold, but not enough to get killed. Only when you get a few levels/items you start killing.
Well, unless you have a ranged hero.

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It's a pain to find parties as a hunter, though. -_-
Yea it can be...

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Oh I’ve played the game before (shit I played it version 1 of it) I’m just surprised the grunt was smart enough to do it… Though I always used ranged heroes anyway so I’d be shooting creeps from the start Dwarven Sharpshooter for the win. “Oh you’re injured but you’re already running back to your base so you’re fine… SNIPED. 2000 range ultimate bitch!” Though later versions introduced too much cheese for my tastes getting random super item X first became more important then leveling, spells, or actual skill IMO and of coruse at higher levels pretty much any hero with life steal was basiclly broken.
Sharpshooter FTW!!

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This just in.

THE POWER OF KRISS COMPELS YOU.
THE POWER OF KRISS COMPELS YOU.
THE POWER OF KRISS COMPELS YOU.
THE POWER OF KRISS COMPELS YOU.
THE POWER OF KRISS COMPELS YOU.
THE POWER OF KRISS COMPELS YOU.


That is all.
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so what did I miss while I was at the con?

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I just realized how awesome our thread tags are.
"Bluecheesium"?! "Khrack"?! "MADNESS"?!?!?!

I LOVE THIS PLACE :3
Lol

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I'm back.


Welcome back

And lol at the Otoya dance

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After a weekend of about 3-4 hours of sleep a night, staffing the Karaoke room into the late evening (and listening to some songs over and over and over again ), helping out at Yaoi Con sponsored events, lightening my wallet in the Dealers Room, and many cosplays over the 4-day con I must now return to being 'normal' . But first to show off some pics from the con

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It took me quite a while but finally the pieces are falling into place. Taking a page from Nighty and Lowe, some of my OCs will have their background explained via narrative instead of the usual profile format. A summary of their abilities will be provided at the end of each story.

This is the prologue to Yunie and Evalanthi's profile story, inspired by Planetarian's "Gentle Jena" T-T.

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Old 2008-05-27, 00:46   Link #351
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After a weekend of about 3-4 hours of sleep a night, staffing the Karaoke room into the late evening (and listening to some songs over and over and over again ), helping out at Yaoi Con sponsored events, lightening my wallet in the Dealers Room, and many cosplays over the 4-day con I must now return to being 'normal' . But first to show off some pics from the con

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Awesome reporting you got there, and ur Chrono outfit is great!

Reminds me how Singapore animecons suck so much, and I'm never around in Perth to see the Waicon ><

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It took me quite a while but finally the pieces are falling into place. Taking a page from Nighty and Lowe, some of my OCs will have their background explained via narrative instead of the usual profile format. A summary of their abilities will be provided at the end of each story.

This is the prologue to Yunie and Evalanthi's profile story, inspired by Planetarian's "Gentle Jena" T-T.

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Still needs more to know what's going on, but this has potential.
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*Cracks knuckles* Not a bad way to do start my regular visits here.

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Kiritsugu Emiya was born in MC 048 on Non-Administered Planet #332, the capital planet of the Zetrandi Corporate Alliance. Like most who lived within the ZCA, Kiritsugu was born into poverty and would have been utilized as slave labor like his fellow laborers save for the fact that he was born to a member of a resistance cell known as the Zetrandi Liberation Front. Rather than waste away on a production line, a plantation or any number of other positions forced upon the lower class, Kiritsugu spent most of his time living in the extensive sewer system beneath the capital city of Samayn, still living in poverty but living in relative freedom at the same time. His parents and their associates were resistance fighters who sought to bring down the entire Alliance one corporation at a time, and they taught Kiri much in the art of guerilla warfare, as well as a smattering of magical spells, which Kiritsugu proved to be quite talented with.
While I'm not going to question or argue about the planet's state of affairs, as I'm going to assume that it is either in the outer rim of the TSAB's sphere of influence or just out in the middle of nowhere, the fact you make it seem out of the way does make it seem that it's just that: out of nowhere, where the TSAB would even be aware of.

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In MC 055, the ZLF received intelligence that one of the top-ranking CEOs of the Alliance had somehow obtained possession of a Lost Logia known as the Book of Darkness. This information was forwarded to the TSAB, who opened communications with the cell shortly afterwards.
Either you did your research, or you made a really accurate guess, because you are actually off by one year. MC 0054 would be the correct year, since it was destroyed about 11 years prior to Nanoha A's, and Nanoha took place 6 months prior, so yeah it's MC 0054.

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The ZLF proposed a deal with the TSAB: in exchange for weapons and support from the Navy, the ZLF would perform an assassination on the Book’s current owner, then retrieve the target and hand it to the Bureau on a silver platter. In exchange for the delivery, the TSAB would then provide fleet support for the ZLF and assist them in taking Samayn and forcing the Alliance to make concessions to the lower class and allow the formation of labor unions.
This goes back to the issue of where your planet seems to be located. Because if it were in the TSAB sphere of influence, the TSAB would not even be there, because they aren't even aware of it's presence.

Now as for the BoD, i'd find that kind of funny, only because I'd say that with the Resistance and all most likely having an abundance of magic users, it seems that the BoD shouldn't have even been on the planet, because of the fact is the user would have most likely wanted it to have the power that's locked within, and already have it's 666 pages filled.

Heck, most of the planet should've been decimated by a rampaging BoD if that were the case.

So is it safe to assume that the user actually kept some restraint and not have used it to collect magical energy to fill the pages?

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To say that the plan was high-risk would be a gross understatement; if any part of the plan were to fail, the team would be almost certainly be cut down by endless waves of reinforcements and Alliance security whether or not they accomplished their objective. In an effort to maximize the mission’s chance of success, every single member of the cell, including the 7-year old Kiritsugu, was assigned to the mission.
While I somewhat question this, we've already seen 9-year old mages being placed under contract to the TSAB, so it's passable.

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The hit went off without a hitch; the infiltration went undetected, the kill was confirmed and the Book of Darkness was recovered (though no sign was ever seen of the Wolkenritter during the course of the mission). Then came the extraction… and all hell broke loose when one of the target’s personal servants stumbled upon the scene as the team was preparing to leave. Her scream brought guards running and set the entire complex on maximum alert.

More than half of the resistance movement was killed trying to get to the extraction point on the complex’s rooftop, cut down by endless waves of Alliance security. But even when the team reached the extraction point, their support was nowhere to be seen. Outnumbered and outgunned, the rebels had no choice but to bunker down and fortify their positions. More than fifteen minutes later, the TSA warship Forerunner arrived on the scene and retrieved Kiritsugu, the last living member of the ZLF, and the Book of Darkness. With no rebellion left to aid, the captain of the Forerunner chose to reneign on the bureau’s promise, ignoring Kiritsugu’s outraged screams of betrayal and threatening to throw him out an airlock if he didn’t sit down and shut up.
All I can say is ouch.

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It would take several years of heated investigation, but Kiritsugu would eventually learn that the Forerunner had received the order to stall its’ approach directly from Gil Graham. His motives for doing so remain unknown to this day.
I question why you would make Gil Graham do that. His primary concern during this time was to destroy the BoD. If you are trying to allude to how he dealt with Hayate, this isn't even like him. Because although yes he was going to freeze Hayate along with the BoD, he was kind enough to let her live a happy life as long as it was possible before the BoD started to act up again.

In this case, by having the Forerunner be delayed as long as possible it goes against the character he's been presented to be.

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Having nowhere else to go, Kiritsugu was absorbed into the navy and served for several weeks aboard the TSA flagship Beginner’s Luck, where he first met Admiral Clyde Harlaown and his family. Clyde made an immensely positive impression on Kiritsugu and forced him to rethink his opinions of the bureau as a whole. However, before Kiritsugu could get to know Clyde as a father-figure, the Book of Darkness destroyed the Beginner’s Luck, taking Clyde with it.
No comments here really.

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In the aftermath of Clyde’s death, Kiritsugu came to the conclusion that the bureau contained both good honest people like Clyde and self-serving blackhearts who needed to be rooted out. Dedicating himself to the ideal of a perfectly just system, Clyde enrolled in the Ground Forces Academy and spent several years working his way through the system, eventually attaining the rank of Enforcer by the time he was 15 years old.
Only one minor error: Enforcer is a position, or a force outside the chain of command.

For instance, Fate by Ground Forces rank is Captain, but she holds the title of Enforcer, in which case if the situation calls for an Enforcer to step up, Fate would be that officer.

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As an Enforcer, Kiritsugu racked up a tremendous list of kills and arrests, eventually becoming one of the single most successful Enforcers in the bureau’s entire history. His rise to fame within the bureau coincided roughly with the enlistment of the Ace Trio into the TSAB, and thus he is sometimes referred to by his peers as “The First Ace”. For a variety of reasons, however, his superiors have done their very best to keep him out of the eyes of the media. Not the least of these reasons is his routine challenging of the ban on mass-based weapons and the logic behind it, even going so far as to design his intelligent device’s forms around the weapons he had used as a child in the resistance.
While it's an interesting history, Kiritsugu is not that much older than Chrono. If anything I'd say he's only 2 or 3 years Chrono's senior. If he just attained his Enforcer status by 15, that's just 2 or 3 years before Nanoha, which I say would be cutting it very close for him to claim the, "First Ace" nickname.

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For his part, Kiritsugu is on good terms with the Aces, particularly Fate, who he knows through Lindy and the rest of the Harlaown family. It is rumored among his coworkers that he has a crush on Hayate Yagami, but Kiritsugu denies this intensely, stating that she’s much too young for him.
LOL In one way yeah he's probably too older for her, since the gap is between 7 - 10 years.

I'll admit, it's better, but there are still a lot of holes and errors in your character design. The above statements should cover what I have noticed and spotted out.
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Old 2008-05-27, 02:21   Link #353
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I question why you would make Gil Graham do that. His primary concern during this time was to destroy the BoD. If you are trying to allude to how he dealt with Hayate, this isn't even like him. Because although yes he was going to freeze Hayate along with the BoD, he was kind enough to let her live a happy life as long as it was possible before the BoD started to act up again.

In this case, by having the Forerunner be delayed as long as possible it goes against the character he's been presented to be.
He's doing it because he's thick headed and despite having his flat our wrong and stupid characterization of him SHREDDED he's still desperately trying to make him seem like an asshole for no good reason besides basiclly not liking him.
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Old 2008-05-27, 02:48   Link #354
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He's doing it because he's thick headed and despite having his flat our wrong and stupid characterization of him SHREDDED he's still desperately trying to make him seem like an asshole for no good reason besides basiclly not liking him.
Interesting

Personally though, I liked his character :3
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Old 2008-05-27, 03:11   Link #355
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Spoiler for Main Profile:


Spoiler for Spells:


Spoiler for Personality:



Spoiler for Additional Info:


Spoiler for Relationships with other characters:




Extra...in other words, sketches >_<

Spoiler for Long Haired Asclei:


Spoiler for Short Haired Asclei:



Spoiler for Break:



I did mention that Asclei transforms whenever he needs to spy on others and gather informatin...right? Anyway, Lanos and the others didn't know about what form Asclei transforms into. However, Fate later found out about it.

Here's a sketch of Fate's expression when she realized that the person before her is...well...you can pretty much tell XD.

Spoiler for eeeeeeeeh?!!!!!!!!!!!:
*taps chin* You know... I can't help but noticing neither Ginga nor Subaru apearing in the relationship chart. You'd think a guy like him would like to keepcontact with his kin.

If you don't mind, I'll ad him to the list of Uomo's (my own Sentoukijin) contacts.

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Yeah...So much for Red Dragons in the Nanohaverse
One dragon does not the power of a dragonflight make.

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Eh? What do you mean?
I'm planning to make Uomo and Koji partners while in the academy. Koji's general acceptance of everyone around him makes him the perfect partner for Uomo, who would have had trouble with other people because of his apearance. I need to know what stands and what has been dropped since you-wrote the last chapter.

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O-ok....

*runs*
Smart move.

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A'dal: ...it is as we calculated. This being is a self evident manifestion of the materium.

Xes'a: Absolute chaos is directing her, and yet she is inline with our cause.

Mirii: Is it by random chance, given the absolute chaos?

Kaa: The difference is too significant to ignore.

Xes'a: What do you suggest?

A'dal: Obeservation.
Kaa: Intervention.

Other Naaru: ...

Mirii: You are always interfering, Kaa.

A'dal: But again, Kaa has a point. Her existence is as limited as our Ces'rauva, a significant reason to intervene, at the same time it makes possible for the Ces'rauva to watch and guide this being's destiny. Not mention this being might illuminate the possibility of a Quera's direction.

Mirii: But that's impossible!

Xes'a: It's just statistically insignificant. This settles it then.

Mirii: I agree on that data point as well, but I emphasize caution. Going out on a limb created Kluize, and in one percentage of the timelines created by this decision, Neltharion will interfere with our work.

Kaa: I will ensure this probability stays as it is.

The songs of the crystalline beings brighten as their plan began unfolding from the past to the future.

Kaa: ...keikakudoori...

Mirii: What was that, Kaa?

Kaa: Nothing.

...
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...

Okay the last bit was Khrack... But what you've said matches perfectly the concept of Absolute Chaos, and yet still works like the Naaru's (actually Kaa's) Ces'rauva. Hence the interest, as it is possible that unbeknownst to them all, one of the Quera may be directing her.
<--- is remembered of the ending of Tales of the Past, where Arthas' was directed by a Naaru (or Quera).

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Fate: It's black, sleek and doesn't jam!
Hayate: Just look the firepower of the device!
Keroko: Oooh hi-techies~! Me want~~!
Nanoha: Sorry, Keroko-chan. I'm testing it first!
Keroko: Hidoi-yo, Nanoha-chaaan~ T_T

Kha: 0_0\\\

Raising Heart: [Didn't you know, Master Kha?]
Bardiche: [Yes, Sir.]
Rein Zwei: Hayate's always loved lots of big explosions desu~~
Artherion: [So eat your heart out, Meatbag.]

Kha: The fact that they are all young ladies makes it very disturbing. <.<

(Note: this is set in the loli-shouta era of the Nanoha timeline)


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The actual document made something very romantic out of it... As Fate and Hayate had already passed on, and the Takamachi sisters are slowly giving out due to the magical strain they've picked up over the years, Kha is struggling to find reason to remain among the living when it seems that the world no longer needed him...

...until he finds a young Keroko duking it out in the Layer against his daughter Teresa that in his grief he had forgotten...

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...
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Badly inspired by CLANNAD no less.
Hoo boy. Whats his reaction to seeing that?

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WHAT IS THIS?!?!?!?!?!?!?
Why, Keroko-chan and Vivio Caramel-dansen of course.

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He's doing it because he's thick headed and despite having his flat our wrong and stupid characterization of him SHREDDED he's still desperately trying to make him seem like an asshole for no good reason besides basiclly not liking him.
Oh come now, just because he hasn't edited it yet doesn't mean he's not listening.
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*taps chin* You know... I can't help but noticing neither Ginga nor Subaru apearing in the relationship chart. You'd think a guy like him would like to keepcontact with his kin.

If you don't mind, I'll ad him to the list of Uomo's (my own Sentoukijin) contacts.
Oh that, its because I havent finished writing the relationship chart yet. I have most of the stuffs in my head right now but I need to write it to make things more orderly. All I can say is that Ginga will be one of the important characters later on in my fanfic. Anyway, right now I'm thinking if I should make Ginga a possible love interest for Asclei....while Lanos have an unrequited love for Teana.


Anyway...can you explain more about the Uomo's contacts? sorry, I didnt get that part


*cough* Anyway, I wanted Asclei to have a dark past...or something along those lines. So yeah, here is the summary of the events that happened to Ascle's life. Lanos pretty much have the same history except I didnt include anything about what his life was before he was taken to the facility. I'd like to point out that Fate and the others doesnt know much about Asclei's past. The only exceptions are Lanos and Skryed.


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you guys can bring up any abnormalities in his past so I can revise it afterwards. If somethings sounds cheesy or anything insufficient, feel free to criticize cuz it actually helps me improve it

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<--- is remembered of the ending of Tales of the Past, where Arthas' was directed by a Naaru (or Quera).
Interestingly, Martin chose to use Muruu's 3D model to represent Ner'zhul in that last scene, most probably due to the lack of a model for the being that was once an intangible enchantment in a block of ice. And I've never really imagined what the Quera were like, but your reaction has created a link between the bright A'dal hovering in Shattrah City, and the darker cousins, and Muruu who has almost completely turned black...

Looks like I have a 3D model of the crystalline Quera after all, besides the Mokona forms they adopt sometimes. :3

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Another scene of A's Destiny GET!

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Hoo boy. Whats his reaction to seeing that?
Shock, grief, resolution, and understanding. Nothing like moments like these that cause a dramatic welling of mana and facilitate a bridge between the materium and the immaterium. :3


@Fate: AAAAH ninja post! Reading it in a while, but a quick browse stuns me. No prizes for guessing why, and I'm waiting for Nighty's take on this will I read closer.
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Looks like it

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I'm planning to make Uomo and Koji partners while in the academy. Koji's general acceptance of everyone around him makes him the perfect partner for Uomo, who would have had trouble with other people because of his apearance. I need to know what stands and what has been dropped since you-wrote the last chapter.
Didn't we talk about this in the previous incarnation?

Besides...it's the academy, that was before the events in StrikerS and BreakerS, right?
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So out of interest, if I want to update links in this incarnation of the OC thread, I assume I have to contact ghazkullzkhllughlkhaaaaan I'm sorry, I swear I tried to remember how to spell your handle, but I forgot.
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Welcome back, kellis. Just going "WAAAAAAAAAAAGH!!!" should get his attention, if you know what I mean.
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