AnimeSuki Forums

Register Forum Rules FAQ Members List Social Groups Search Today's Posts Mark Forums Read

Go Back   AnimeSuki Forum > Anime Discussion > Older Series > To Aru Majutsu no Index

Notices

Reply
 
Thread Tools
Old 2011-03-29, 02:14   Link #1021
WiliamZ0
Senior Member
 
 
Join Date: Jan 2011
Anyone can give me a help ? I need your opinion about my Oc and I'm looking for a beta reader for my fanfic (TAMnI Alternative Testament) (I have remade it, but I don't think my grammar correct yet ... I also already start the next chapter of my fanfic)

I have 3 OC in my sleeve and Here is one of them (I still fixing the other 2)

Nakatsugawa Rinnosuke

Spoiler for Information:

Last edited by WiliamZ0; 2011-03-29 at 07:26.
WiliamZ0 is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 2011-03-29, 06:26   Link #1022
MarksmanKNG
Junior Member
 
Join Date: Jan 2011
William, that looks really a lot of firepower you know. Multiple abilities is very enticing for a Gary Stu effect. Do remember that even Aqua of the Back has limitations and a weakness.
MarksmanKNG is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 2011-03-29, 07:16   Link #1023
WiliamZ0
Senior Member
 
 
Join Date: Jan 2011
I don't think so ... since, he (My OC) can't use multiple abilities at once

Ex: If he use power one, he can't use another power
IF he want to use another power, he must turned off the power he used, then it allowed him to used another power

Moreover, with a lot of limitation with the abilities; I could say he is my OC who have the most fatal weakness ... (unless he used his powers carefully, he won't win)
WiliamZ0 is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 2011-03-29, 07:53   Link #1024
MarksmanKNG
Junior Member
 
Join Date: Jan 2011
Okay, if you say so. Just keep that in mind.
MarksmanKNG is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 2011-03-29, 14:13   Link #1025
Ritsu026
Ritsu's boyfriend
 
 
Join Date: Aug 2010
Location: in Ritsu's hands
Age: 17
Quote:
Originally Posted by WiliamZ0 View Post
Anyone can give me a help ? I need your opinion about my Oc and I'm looking for a beta reader for my fanfic (TAMnI Alternative Testament) (I have remade it, but I don't think my grammar correct yet ... I also already start the next chapter of my fanfic)

I have 3 OC in my sleeve and Here is one of them (I still fixing the other 2)

Nakatsugawa Rinnosuke

Spoiler for Information:
First I'm sure that this power was taken from Heroes. The guy who appeared only in one episode for 15 minutes. He can't create black holes , he just makes something like a portal to other dimension , but it's still unknown if the object is OK when it comes out of the portal. The portal is like a space hole.
__________________
Ritsu026 is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 2011-03-29, 15:49   Link #1026
Chaos2Frozen
The Evil Within
 
 
Join Date: Nov 2006
Location: Drangelic, or by a different name...
Age: 25
Just out of curiosity, how many people here are familiar with the Durarara!! Light Novel?
Chaos2Frozen is online now   Reply With Quote
Old 2011-03-29, 19:26   Link #1027
SuzushinaYuriko
SHSL Lurker
 
 
Join Date: Apr 2010
Location: Academy City
I've read a lot of anni-fiesta's translations for Durarara!!, but I'm not sure of the entire plot behind the later novels. I am reading volume 9 which she is currently translating.
__________________
SuzushinaYuriko is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 2011-03-29, 19:35   Link #1028
WiliamZ0
Senior Member
 
 
Join Date: Jan 2011
Quote:
Originally Posted by Ritsu026 View Post
First I'm sure that this power was taken from Heroes. The guy who appeared only in one episode for 15 minutes. He can't create black holes , he just makes something like a portal to other dimension , but it's still unknown if the object is OK when it comes out of the portal. The portal is like a space hole.
Humm? I don't know what you are talking about ...

Anyway, I use these as my preference
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Black_hole
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Quantum_gravity

I just think that gravity also able to create something like black hole ... That's all

Anyway ... What is 'Heroes' you are talking about

Just ask ...
WiliamZ0 is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 2011-03-29, 19:49   Link #1029
MarksmanKNG
Junior Member
 
Join Date: Jan 2011
Heroes is a TV series. Here

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Heroes_(TV_series)


A planet's gravity is capable of creating a black hole at a specific phase of the planet's life cycle. The criteria for which planets are capable is specific which I'm not so sure on that.
MarksmanKNG is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 2011-03-29, 21:15   Link #1030
Mr.Kyon
I crack you up
 
 
Join Date: Dec 2010
Age: 20
So I was bored at school and I thought up of this.

Enter Ollerus&Silvia with Fiamma.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6855885
Mr.Kyon is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 2011-03-29, 21:58   Link #1031
Chaos2Frozen
The Evil Within
 
 
Join Date: Nov 2006
Location: Drangelic, or by a different name...
Age: 25
Quote:
Originally Posted by yukirosuzuka View Post
I've read a lot of anni-fiesta's translations for Durarara!!, but I'm not sure of the entire plot behind the later novels. I am reading volume 9 which she is currently translating.
Hmm... It's not the same though; Just like in Index, you have to read the novel to pick up on the little details and flavors that make up the series. Mah, it's just a question anyway. Because I thought it would be great to sit down and try to figure out how to make a crossover, given how similiar both stories are - Multiple perspectives, supernatural setting, 'underworld' gangs etc... Plus knowing that their two authors are 'buddying' up with each other gives me more incentive lol
Chaos2Frozen is online now   Reply With Quote
Old 2011-03-30, 00:16   Link #1032
MrTerrorist
Takao Tsundere Cruiser
 
 
Join Date: Oct 2008
Location: Classified
The final chapter of "A Certain Destined Introduction"!

Read it here!
__________________
MrTerrorist is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 2011-03-30, 08:45   Link #1033
WiliamZ0
Senior Member
 
 
Join Date: Jan 2011
Now for my 2nd OC for TAMnI : Alternative Testament


Kinoshita Merry
Spoiler for Information:
WiliamZ0 is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 2011-03-30, 09:45   Link #1034
MrTerrorist
Takao Tsundere Cruiser
 
 
Join Date: Oct 2008
Location: Classified
Wait, this character sounds like Merry Nightmare from Yumekui Merry mixed with.....Hideoyoshi. There's nothing original about "her, she's just a mixed of two different characters. I suggest you be a more creative with an original character with original looks, design and powers or just say this is Merry from Yumekui Merry.

Also, i suggest you reduced Rinnosuke to have two powers instead. I will tolerate that he has two powerful abilities but three...that's overkill. Also call his "Reality Breaker" into something different and more cooler and original like the "Hand of Destruction" or "The Fist of Doom".
__________________
MrTerrorist is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 2011-03-30, 09:54   Link #1035
WiliamZ0
Senior Member
 
 
Join Date: Jan 2011
Quote:
Originally Posted by MrTerrorist View Post
Wait, this character sounds like Merry Nightmare from Yumekui Merry mixed with.....Hideoyoshi. There's nothing original about "her, she's just a mixed of two different characters. I suggest you be a more creative with an original character with original looks, design and powers or just say this is Merry from Yumekui Merry.

Also, i suggest you reduced Rinnosuke to have two powers instead. I will tolerate that he has two powerful abilities but three...that's overkill. Also call his "Reality Breaker" into something different and more cooler and original like the "Hand of Destruction" or "The Fist of Doom".
Get Caught (Well yeah! I actually based this character on Merry Nightmare (I like her XD))
For name~ This isn't final yet~ Help me if you want to XD (but not in power and personality section)

for Rinnosuke, his eyes rather sensitive to light (I ever heard a eye problem for that called ... uh oh I forget)~ making he VERY RARELY (In fact he almost never ) used the third power.

His sense (sight and hearing sense) quite awesome (not as awesome as saint) and quite sensitive, I intended to leave it like that ~
WiliamZ0 is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 2011-03-30, 10:00   Link #1036
WiliamZ0
Senior Member
 
 
Join Date: Jan 2011
And! more info~ Even if I like hideyoshi, I don't based my character on him (only his family name)

Again, this OC only say that he is male (no one know the reality, even the teachers! They just put the data and quite surprised to learn that 'the boy' is more like girl than a boy)

You can say it a trap or it isn't a trap XD (I like preparing twist when I want to XD)
WiliamZ0 is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 2011-03-30, 10:12   Link #1037
MrTerrorist
Takao Tsundere Cruiser
 
 
Join Date: Oct 2008
Location: Classified
Quote:
Originally Posted by WiliamZ0 View Post
Get Caught (Well yeah! I actually based this character on Merry Nightmare (I like her XD))
For name~ This isn't final yet~ Help me if you want to XD (but not in power and personality section)

for Rinnosuke, his eyes rather sensitive to light (I ever heard a eye problem for that called ... uh oh I forget)~ making he VERY RARELY (In fact he almost never ) used the third power.

His sense (sight and hearing sense) quite awesome (not as awesome as saint) and quite sensitive, I intended to leave it like that ~
I see, basically it's not a power, just that Rinnosuke has very sensitive eyes and ears which allows him to sense things more better than an ordinary person. Of course the downside of such skills is that since his senses are more sensitive, he can be defeated easily by being blinded or deafen. So therefore this character has to wear sunglasses and a special hearing aid to protect his eyes and ears am i correct?
__________________
MrTerrorist is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 2011-03-30, 10:22   Link #1038
WiliamZ0
Senior Member
 
 
Join Date: Jan 2011
Correct! Ah! I remember now!

His eyes' problem called Photophobia (Light Sensitivity)
He use sunglasses with ultraviolet (UV) protection.
He also sometimes used special contact lenses (I don't know what it called) (But he hate them so much)
And yeah! He also wears a special hearing aid
WiliamZ0 is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 2011-03-31, 20:12   Link #1039
Mr.Kyon
I crack you up
 
 
Join Date: Dec 2010
Age: 20
Spoiler for I have no idea what this is...:
Mr.Kyon is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 2011-03-31, 21:58   Link #1040
WiliamZ0
Senior Member
 
 
Join Date: Jan 2011
Finally! The third OC for my fanfic

Charlotte Ainsworth
Spoiler for Information:
WiliamZ0 is offline   Reply With Quote
Reply

Tags
character, crack, crossover ideas, discussion, fanfiction

Thread Tools

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off

Forum Jump


All times are GMT -5. The time now is 08:05.


Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.8.7
Copyright ©2000 - 2014, vBulletin Solutions, Inc.
We use Silk.