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Old 2011-06-07, 21:47   Link #31221
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Don't ask where this came from. And don't blame me! The plot bunnies put a gun to my head!

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Not sure if I'll post this one to ff.net or not...

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Old 2011-06-07, 23:17   Link #31222
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Don't ask where this came from. And don't blame me! The plot bunnies put a gun to my head!

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Not sure if I'll post this one to ff.net or not...

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*snerk* Oh, yeah, +1 for funny. Poor Zaffy (though hey, he actually gets the last laugh in the omake!)...
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Old 2011-06-07, 23:22   Link #31223
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So here's my take on the whole Vivio/Hayate thing.

Spoiler for Never Easy:


Spoiler for note:
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Old 2011-06-08, 02:13   Link #31224
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Doesn't seem to be as popular of a story, heh, but posted Whipped Part 3 to ff.net for those who are interested. :P
I am anxiously following that series, now that you have finished Future Tense. But I am generally lurking, so I didn't thought it was necessary for me to write about how much I enjoy this fic.
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Old 2011-06-08, 08:35   Link #31225
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So here's my take on the whole Vivio/Hayate thing.

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That's... Pretty much how I'd expect it would go in canon...

Except for the part where Hayate admits that she's straight.

You know that 7Arcs won't let any character admit that they're straight unless married.
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Old 2011-06-08, 08:50   Link #31226
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So here's my take on the whole Vivio/Hayate thing.

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I was half-expecting Hayate to reply with "Stay away woman, I'm chaste!"
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Old 2011-06-08, 09:07   Link #31227
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I was half-expecting Hayate to reply with "Stay away woman, I'm chaste!"
In canon, she probably is.
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Old 2011-06-08, 10:06   Link #31228
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So here's my take on the whole Vivio/Hayate thing.

Spoiler for Never Easy:


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Well, you don`t always have you feelings returned. And it`s good thing, that Vivio have to learn this from the person who willl not play with her feeling, or lie to her (of course if someone so arrogant(or stupid) is still exist, to play with Nanoha`s daughter`s feelings).
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Old 2011-06-08, 10:47   Link #31229
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Don't ask where this came from. And don't blame me! The plot bunnies put a gun to my head!

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Not sure if I'll post this one to ff.net or not...

Edit: Page Claim for potty mouths!
I could have sworn Zaffy was doing it intentionally right from the start... XD

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*stumbles in, spewing blood from an ulcer*

I really did try to write a short story this time. I failed. Damn you deathcurse, damn you for the plotbunnies.

Here's a teaser to my contribution for the Vivio x Hayate trend. This is something of an unofficial continuation to deathcurse's HayateVivio stories though I propell things a couple of years into the future. Reading You Never Lose By Loving, Lose By Holding Back and her ongoing Prerogative of the Brave by the original author might be a good idea.

Prelude

No matter how tall the mountain,
it cannot block out the sun
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I meant to write Vivio as an adult doing adult things with Hayate. Right now however, this is looking more like Saving Private Ryan. -_- Sigh.

Yeah, deathcurse made Vivio SWAT, so I upped her career a bit to something like Navy SEAL. xD
This is definitely more badass than Saving Private Ryan. Vivio's channelling enough grizzled old Solid Snake (probably all that imagery of crawling around at work here) to increase the franchise's testosterone levels by at least 10 folds.

Keep it coming Shigan ;D

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So here's my take on the whole Vivio/Hayate thing.

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Hehe Vivio makes a fundamental error ;D Back to the drawing board m'girl.

A little nitpicking - Hayate's last line made me cringe a bit - it sounds somewhat like she's telling Vivio to leave/resign, which would be a rather generous rubbing of salt in fresh wounds.
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Old 2011-06-08, 10:58   Link #31230
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In canon, she probably is.
I have a hard time believing Lieutenant Colonel Gropesalot as one

Btw, I took another read on Dezo's Shadow's Fall recently, and was a bit disappointed that the recruiters didn't use this instead :
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Old 2011-06-08, 11:00   Link #31231
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Did the Dog Days/MSLN crossover fict got udated?
I can't remember it's title...
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Old 2011-06-08, 11:47   Link #31232
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Don't ask where this came from. And don't blame me! The plot bunnies put a gun to my head!

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Not sure if I'll post this one to ff.net or not...

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Arf's swearing at the end was pretty funny . Although I was expecting her to smirk and say, "No, he's my bitch."

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So here's my take on the whole Vivio/Hayate thing.

Spoiler for Never Easy:


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I liked how Hayate was kind but firm in pointing out that you can't just change sexuality that way. Although if she apparently has children in this story, shouldn't that kind of clue Vivio in that Hayate's probably not available?

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I was half-expecting Hayate to reply with "Stay away woman, I'm chaste!"
The groping is used as a defence mechanism to keep people away?
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Old 2011-06-08, 12:56   Link #31233
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There's stuff I write, which features a lot of characters, not just Yuuno.

F91/Raiser also writes a lot of Yuuno-centric stories.

Epsilon/Yasanagi has one as well....

Material Days - Yuuno and the Materials are the stars of the show.

Materials no Jikan - Younger versions of Yuuno and the Materials are the stars of this fic.

Rise of the Daemon Kaiser - Another good fic.

Three's Company - Yuuno, Hayate and Vivio are the stars here.

The Location of Happiness - Yuuno-centric story

And there's the Relationships series, which can be found by clicking on my sig.

And "Blood That Flows" - Slayers/Nanoha crossover, though no one character is really the star at this point anymore.

So, no, I won't hate you for shipping Yuunoha.
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It's still getting under way, but I think Yuuno's Vault of Whispers (cross with Borderlands) is worth taking a look at.

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Old 2011-06-08, 13:01   Link #31234
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I liked how Hayate was kind but firm in pointing out that you can't just change sexuality that way. Although if she apparently has children in this story, shouldn't that kind of clue Vivio in that Hayate's probably not available?
Uh, dc...

In the A's manga, Hayate refers to the knights as her kids.
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Old 2011-06-08, 15:13   Link #31235
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Uh, dc...

In the A's manga, Hayate refers to the knights as her kids.
*Goes back and re-reads*

Ah, I see. I think I got a sense of "Hayate had married and had children" when I read the fic the first time for some reason instead of thinking of the Wolkenritter .
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Old 2011-06-08, 16:27   Link #31236
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This is definitely more badass than Saving Private Ryan. Vivio's channelling enough grizzled old Solid Snake (probably all that imagery of crawling around at work here) to increase the franchise's testosterone levels by at least 10 folds.

Keep it coming Shigan ;D
Serving. Not Solid Snake (thou, I suppose Rhen could be). She's channeling this!!!

Someone asked if there were gonna be any action in this. Some, but I wasn't planning on writing about Vivio deployed on badass STG Woof missions. It's mostly gonna be her and Hayate resolving some of their relationship issues and getting into trouble .

The basis for my story is that Viv and Hayate do end up together at some point between those four years of 15 to 19 though ^^;, so depending on how deathcurse's story goes this might end up an AU of an fanfic, sort of O_o. *shoots deathcurse meaningsful look*
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Old 2011-06-08, 17:52   Link #31237
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Well, you don`t always have you feelings returned. And it`s good thing, that Vivio have to learn this from the person who willl not play with her feeling, or lie to her (of course if someone so arrogant(or stupid) is still exist, to play with Nanoha`s daughter`s feelings).
Yeah, there are cases where the confessed to person will take advantage, sleep with the other person, and then say they don't return the feelings. That's why Nanoha thanked Hayate at the end.

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A little nitpicking - Hayate's last line made me cringe a bit - it sounds somewhat like she's telling Vivio to leave/resign, which would be a rather generous rubbing of salt in fresh wounds.
Hm, well, with that line I was trying to show Hayate being supportive of whatever decision Vivio makes in order for her to move on. If she just needed time away from Hayate before returning to work, or if she wanted to not be around Hayate all together.

Any suggestions on how to make the line better?
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Old 2011-06-08, 17:54   Link #31238
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The groping is used as a defence mechanism to keep people away?
I think I've read a fic utilizing that reason somewhere...
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Old 2011-06-08, 18:09   Link #31239
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That would be my Behind the Smile where she uses the breast groping to make the guys at her school think she's a lesbian and leave her alone due to flashbacks of being raped as a child. She also supposes she does that because she's focused on other's bodies since she's disgusted with her own.
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Old 2011-06-08, 18:18   Link #31240
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Hm, well, with that line I was trying to show Hayate being supportive of whatever decision Vivio makes in order for her to move on. If she just needed time away from Hayate before returning to work, or if she wanted to not be around Hayate all together.

Any suggestions on how to make the line better?
Maybe have Hayate say something along the lines of "I understand if Vivio wants some vacation time, to transfer units or resign. Please don't worry about anything if that's what she wants, I'll make sure it happens without marring her record..." instead?

By putting Hayate's understanding of the reasons behind Vivio's possibly needing some time away first, and the options second, it might show Hayate's sympathy better. That way you can keep Hayate's offer of making sure things are signed off well (which I understand as Hayate feeling a bit guilty and wanting to make sure that Vivio's okay) without making it sound like she's trying to get rid of Vivio.

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