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StratoSpear · 2011-09-29, 07:17

Finally got my first chapter up, though there might be layout errors because of unknown reasons

Also ignore the "ISInfinite Stratos" thing on the top, not sure how I to fix that..

Anyways, my first IS fanfic(and my first ever attempt at fanfiction):

Infinite Stratos: Athena Bouclier

ZeroXSEED · 2011-09-29, 07:18

@ Wavehawk
.........

I'm afraid of her like hell , but now, I'm LESS afraid (though she's still scarier than the rest of haremmettes

)

AND despite all the shit and giggles she pulled, she's still a professional at her job.

Old Man Hawk is the best, cheers!

@StratoSpear
Congratulations for the first fic, it's started out with a bang and even the OC main character are very modest (at least that's what appear in this chapter) compared to some OC pilot we can found.
But there's something I would ask, does Minerva has certain flaws? For example, even though it has anti-I.S. weapon, it has less powerful barrier and no absolute defense? If it has anything I.S. has, that would be awful.

Anyway, we share similar idea then, conventional weapon with I.S. technology will appear in the future chapters.

Eratas123 · 2011-09-29, 07:23

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Now that's pure win!

(But where's the Tatenashi/Kyuukai accident??

)

Gonna put that in the third part if I ever make one. Will be kind of similar to the light novels where she does the lap pillow thing

.

Ichika's a coward and Irish can't catch a break

. do you think I should put this as an Omake or part of the canon storyline?

wavehawk · 2011-09-29, 07:28

Seriously. Nobody got the references I dropped for <Ren>'s origin at all? Is it TOO subtle?

ZeroXSEED · 2011-09-29, 07:31

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Seriously. Nobody got the references I dropped for <Ren>'s origin at all? Is it TOO subtle?

G.I. Joe? Ahh...sorry, I never watch that show /read the comics...so I don't know.

Eratas123 · 2011-09-29, 07:31

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Originally Posted by wavehawk

Seriously. Nobody got the references I dropped for <Ren>'s origin at all? Is it TOO subtle?

I never was a fan of the G.I Joe series so I wouldn't have gotten it no matter how much I read.

wavehawk · 2011-09-29, 07:46

...I was hoping someone would realize it and find out that it's actually a G.i.Joe X Infinite Stratos crossover fic, but it's too subtle for even that...
(sits in corner, deep dark air of depression)

Eratas123 · 2011-09-29, 07:49

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Originally Posted by wavehawk

...I was hoping someone would realize it and find out that it's actually a G.i.Joe X Infinite Stratos crossover fic, but it's too subtle for even that...
(sits in corner, deep dark air of depression)

Aww, it's alright

Just think of Charlotte and everything will be okay.

wavehawk · 2011-09-29, 08:03

(Thinks of <Ren> sneaking into homes at night and stabbign them silently in their sleep...)

StratoSpear · 2011-09-29, 08:05

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Originally Posted by ZeroXSEED

@StratoSpear
Congratulations for the first fic, it's started out with a bang and even the OC main character are very modest (at least that's what appear in this chapter) compared to some OC pilot we can found.
But there's something I would ask, does Minerva has certain flaws? For example, even though it has anti-I.S. weapon, it has less powerful barrier and no absolute defense? If it has anything I.S. has, that would be awful.

Anyway, we share similar idea then, conventional weapon with I.S. technology will appear in the future chapters.

Thanks!

To answer your question:
The Minerva does have an Absolute Defense barrier installed.

It is integrated with IS technology, after all. Then again, yes, the Minerva does have flaws. One of which is already hinted with Minerva's battle-armor foundation.

Being a full, physical suit of armor, it would not be able to self-repair any damages to the armor unlike the IS. There may be more flaws, but I'll leave it to the fic to bring you through :3

Hasumi · 2011-09-29, 08:09

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Originally Posted by wavehawk

...I was hoping someone would realize it and find out that it's actually a G.i.Joe X Infinite Stratos crossover fic, but it's too subtle for even that...
(sits in corner, deep dark air of depression)

Your age is showing mate.

But do you really have no plans of putting
that up in FF.net?

A real waste if you ask me.

Eratas123 · 2011-09-29, 08:13

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Originally Posted by wavehawk

(Thinks of <Ren> sneaking into homes at night and stabbign them silently in their sleep...)

*Prepares Shotgun and kitchen knife and places them on the bed while drinking coffee to stay awake*

wavehawk · 2011-09-29, 08:33

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Originally Posted by Eratas123

*Prepares Shotgun and kitchen knife and places them on the bed while drinking coffee to stay awake*

As you sip your coffe, you notice the kitchen knife is missing, and there's a cold, sharp feeling at your neck...

Eratas123 · 2011-09-29, 08:40

As I feel the sharp prickling at my neck I throw the coffee over my shoulder and the piping hot liquid makes contact with the person behind me

wavehawk · 2011-09-29, 08:41

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Originally Posted by Eratas123

As I feel the sharp prickling at my neck I throw the coffee over my shoulder and the piping hot liquid makes contact with the person behind me

Ichika: "OWOWOWOWOWOWOWOW!!!"

Eratas123 · 2011-09-29, 08:44

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Originally Posted by wavehawk

Ichika: "OWOWOWOWOWOWOWOW!!!"

Exactly who I was aiming for

ZeroXSEED · 2011-09-29, 10:32

For some reason, rather than writing chapter 9, I draw a mock Illustration...

Should search for a scanner tomorrow...

MeisterBabylon · 2011-09-29, 11:06

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SO FABULOUS!

BLITZ, LET'S USE HIM AS COUNTERPART TO YOSHI!

(But then again Karon might be too cheerful for my standard...how I can do it?)

I planned that later in the year, after an arc where Imouto helps Karon be more natural and Ichika helps her get over her grief, Gou appears as her true persona while Imouto 'enrols' as a separate student in Class 1-2. That way, she'd probably be as dark/manipulative/cunning as you need her to be.

Though I haven't quite decided what she's like in the rebuild of my fanon. Right now, I'm leaning towards something like a mix of Red Rangerness with some Irresponsible Captain Tylor and Tachibana Miya (Amagami). Or you guys can run with whatever and I might like it in the end! lol

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@ MeisterBabylon
I want to use Maxi-sensei, but the background might not fit my mind...would you mind if I change it a little to suit our tastes?

No problem. If its good enough, I'll use it as his next build, because I need to update my fanon to the novel details and to the changes that I will make to Karon.

falcolobo · 2011-09-29, 12:44

SECOND CHANCE: CHAPTER 2 IS UP!

LINK: SECOND CHANCE CHAPTER 2

ZeroXSEED · 2011-09-29, 14:02

Chapter 9 is about 15 % finished

Spoiler for ho yay:

The fact that someone *cough*Mayuzumi*cough* actually record the conversation by placing a recording device beforehand...

2011-09-29, 07:17	Link #1801
StratoSpear Sir Spiral Sallet Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: The Elysium	Finally got my first chapter up, though there might be layout errors because of unknown reasons Also ignore the "ISInfinite Stratos" thing on the top, not sure how I to fix that.. Anyways, my first IS fanfic(and my first ever attempt at fanfiction): Infinite Stratos: Athena Bouclier __________________ "You cannot be bad at watching a movie. You cannot be bad at listening to an album. ...But you can be bad at playing a videogame, and the game will punish you and deny you access to the rest of the videogame."

2011-09-29, 07:18	Link #1802
ZeroXSEED Jackass Cat Lover Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: SPARTAAAAA!!!!!!	@ Wavehawk ......... I'm afraid of her like hell , but now, I'm LESS afraid (though she's still scarier than the rest of haremmettes ) AND despite all the shit and giggles she pulled, she's still a professional at her job. Old Man Hawk is the best, cheers! @StratoSpear Congratulations for the first fic, it's started out with a bang and even the OC main character are very modest (at least that's what appear in this chapter) compared to some OC pilot we can found. But there's something I would ask, does Minerva has certain flaws? For example, even though it has anti-I.S. weapon, it has less powerful barrier and no absolute defense? If it has anything I.S. has, that would be awful. Anyway, we share similar idea then, conventional weapon with I.S. technology will appear in the future chapters. __________________ "I.S. Fandom is highly volatile domain filled by jaded readers tired of cliche. They're also especially skeptic to OC, especially male OC" "Why do you ask? Imagine this: look at those, those are a bunch of character you like, bunch of characters you identified well. Then there's that machine, singlehandedly flipped the social order, where females become more dominant, and boost the advancement of technology." "Then suddenly you look at him, he appeared out of nowhere, with no convincing background or relation to other character, cooler than male main character squared despite just as flat in personality, stomp the heroines and stole their heart (and possibly body) with his uberwank machine" "How do you NOT feel angry again? Oh wait, you create him"

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wavehawk All Decade's Fault Join Date: Jul 2006	Seriously. Nobody got the references I dropped for <Ren>'s origin at all? Is it TOO subtle? __________________ "This is the worst webpage ever. Of all time."

2011-09-29, 07:46	Link #1807
wavehawk All Decade's Fault Join Date: Jul 2006	...I was hoping someone would realize it and find out that it's actually a G.i.Joe X Infinite Stratos crossover fic, but it's too subtle for even that... (sits in corner, deep dark air of depression) __________________ "This is the worst webpage ever. Of all time."

2011-09-29, 08:03	Link #1809
wavehawk All Decade's Fault Join Date: Jul 2006	(Thinks of <Ren> sneaking into homes at night and stabbign them silently in their sleep...) __________________ "This is the worst webpage ever. Of all time."

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Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	As I feel the sharp prickling at my neck I throw the coffee over my shoulder and the piping hot liquid makes contact with the person behind me

2011-09-29, 10:32	Link #1817
ZeroXSEED Jackass Cat Lover Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: SPARTAAAAA!!!!!!	For some reason, rather than writing chapter 9, I draw a mock Illustration... Should search for a scanner tomorrow... __________________ "I.S. Fandom is highly volatile domain filled by jaded readers tired of cliche. They're also especially skeptic to OC, especially male OC" "Why do you ask? Imagine this: look at those, those are a bunch of character you like, bunch of characters you identified well. Then there's that machine, singlehandedly flipped the social order, where females become more dominant, and boost the advancement of technology." "Then suddenly you look at him, he appeared out of nowhere, with no convincing background or relation to other character, cooler than male main character squared despite just as flat in personality, stomp the heroines and stole their heart (and possibly body) with his uberwank machine" "How do you NOT feel angry again? Oh wait, you create him"

2011-09-29, 12:44	Link #1819
falcolobo The Third Runner Join Date: Dec 2010 Location: In my house	SECOND CHANCE: CHAPTER 2 IS UP! LINK: SECOND CHANCE CHAPTER 2 __________________

2011-09-29, 14:02	Link #1820
ZeroXSEED Jackass Cat Lover Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: SPARTAAAAA!!!!!!	Chapter 9 is about 15 % finished Spoiler for ho yay: Three weeks since Class-rep tournament, many things happen in the very Monday. Two new students are transferred, one is a guy, and the other is a girl that hates me and Madoka’s guts. I and Madoka having a brawl with her, Madoka is injured in process. Charles the guy, became my roommate and Madoka is kicked. One week after that day, my mood never gets better, the same goes for Madoka. Hell, it’s been two days since we talk informally outside of training schedule, for some reason, Madoka always kept her distance from me. Normally, I’ll ignore a girl if she doesn’t want me to approach her. But based on what happened when I ignored Rin in her desperate state, doing that will made me a huge jerk and cause further misunderstanding. As such, I planned to talk with her privately during the lunch time. “Everyone has to change up, as we'll be doing IS practice together with Class 2. Dismissed!" Chifuyu-nee clapped her hands to prompt everyone into action. I and Charles went to locker room. Obviously because the girls change inside the classroom. “Ichika, it’s seems that your relationship with Madoka-san has yet to be better” “If anything, it’s become worse…outside of training, we doesn’t talk even a little” “Seriously? That’s bad” “I want to open a conversation…but considering how quiet Madoka is…it’s hard to do, especially that her mind wasn’t in the better condition” We arrived in the changing room, however, it’s seems that Charles always wore the lower parts inside his uniform… “What’s the changing room for if you wore it inside” “Everyone is doing it, isn’t that right?” he retorted and sticks his tongue as he began to wear his IS outfit. Geez… It’s true that the girls often wore their I.S. outfit as substitute for underwear, but for me, who’s wearing pants, its felt strange. So Charles’ must be special… "The suit you're wearing really looks good. Where's it made in?" "Ah, um, this is a suit created by Dunois' Enterprise! Though it was developed through the basic Greek design, it seems to be a thoroughly customized version." "Dunois? I seem to have heard of that before..." "Yup, that's my family. My dad's the president, I guess it should be the largest IS related enterprise in France." "Ohh! So Charles is the son of the president. No wonder." "Hm? No wonder what?" "Yup. Well, how should I put it? You have an aura like you're grew up in some great environment. Now I understand." "Great environment...huh?" Charles suddenly looked away. Did I say something I shouldn't have said? He's showing a complicated look right now. "Well, compared to me, Ichika-san's even more impressive, right? That you're Orimura Chifuyu-san's little brother." "Hahaha, you idiot." Anyway, Charles’ figure is…androgynous, to say at the least…and no, not only his face. Girls have hourglass, guys have reverse triangle, as for Charles…he’s perfect rectangle… I’m not kidding, Girls has their hips wider than shoulder, and vice versa for the guys. Charles’ shoulder just happened to have the same width as his hips, but has obviously male waist. He’ll… he even has…formed chest, the same size as Rin. If I was drunk, I could mistake him for a flat-chested girl… I actually freaked out when I found about it in the shower yesterday… “What are you staring…” he asked awkwardly “It’s definitely not my outfit now”. “Umm you said its Gynecomastia right?” Gynecomastia or Gynaecomastia, is the abnormal development of large mammary glands in males resulting in breast enlargement. The term comes from the Greek γυνή gyné (stem gynaik-) meaning "woman" and μαστός mastós meaning "breast". The condition can occur physiologically in neonates (due to female hormones from the mother), in adolescence, and in the elderly (Both in adolescence and elderly it is an abnormal condition associated with disease or metabolic disorders). In adolescent boys the condition is often a source of distress, but for the large majority of boys whose pubescent gynecomastia is not due to obesity, the breast development shrinks or disappears within a couple of years “…those things must bother you all the time eh?” He smirked “Ichika no ecchi” “I’m not!” I wailed in embarrassment, well, probably I am a pervert…from certain point of view… I felt a sharp gaze as I removed my blazer. “What are you staring?” “Uhh, n-no…nothing…” “Really?” I continued to open my shirt, and the gaze became sharper and sharper, as if someone targeted me with a laser designator… Following me for every inch, for each curves and bulges... “Ero no oujisama” “H-Hai, sorry, I just want to compare...aha-ha-ha” “Compare?” “A-ha-ha…you see…my body is far from manly…I felt…inferior” Inferior? Ah, I see… it’s not only girls that can felt their confidence shattered by other girl with relatively superior figure, guys also just like that. “Ichika has very good form” “Really?” “You’ muscles aren’t too large, but they look well toned and very sturdy, and exceptionally strong too” Exceptionally strong, well, I can lift 140 kg barbell during bench press test, more than three times most girls can lift. Of course there are some strange anomalies like Houki (80 kg) and Bodewig (90 kg) … (I’m not kidding; I was freaked out with the show of strength, especially that Bodewig sneered at me after doing it with her scrawny, childlike body) “That’s because I have strict, well balanced diet… I always knew training alone is not enough” “Hmm, maybe I might try that as well” "You should, before it’s too late" It’s not only for good muscles, but for the rest of your life. Healthy diet ensures good life. Speaking of late, we quickly rushed out of the room in fear of Chifuyu-nee's wrath. The fact that someone coughMayuzumicough actually record the conversation by placing a recording device beforehand... __________________ "I.S. Fandom is highly volatile domain filled by jaded readers tired of cliche. They're also especially skeptic to OC, especially male OC" "Why do you ask? Imagine this: look at those, those are a bunch of character you like, bunch of characters you identified well. Then there's that machine, singlehandedly flipped the social order, where females become more dominant, and boost the advancement of technology." "Then suddenly you look at him, he appeared out of nowhere, with no convincing background or relation to other character, cooler than male main character squared despite just as flat in personality, stomp the heroines and stole their heart (and possibly body) with his uberwank machine" "How do you NOT feel angry again? Oh wait, you create him"