Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[mega1987]

Originally Posted by Nanya01

StrikerS...

GO!

Peek's Mini-Arcs:

Yagami Mid Four Dwell Takamachi Scrya Fatherhood Harlaown Dreams Dance Healing Twins Advice History Onwards Cycle Playdate Forging Meetings Search Valkyrie News Coda

BTF Omakes:

Old Iron Omakes 1, 2, 3 Mr Snuggles Omake Oh Bandit Tree Old Iron Omakes 4, 5

Spoiler for Blood That Flows - StrikerS Start:

Hayate, dressed in a brown mini-skirt military outfit smiled and saluted at the preliminary staff of the new Riot Force group. "Morning, everyone." She said from her position on top of a small stage.

"Morning." The group said as one.

"As you know, this is the first official meeting of the new Riot Force group. As it stands, we are an experimental group that was formed to be able to move freely without red tape clogging us down, as well as the ability to respond to any sort of crisis, regardless if it's Ground Forces, Navy or Air Force that would take care of it normally. Because of the large amount of staff that will be here right away, we are also tasked with the policing of various Lost Logia that are smuggled through Cranagan. The Bureau will continue to police Lost Logia as normal, so we only have to deal with any that happens here, or if we run into them while on a mission." She fought the urge to smile as the various staff members nodded their heads. "Keep in mind, that not all of the staff is here yet. Over the next couple of weeks, there will be other members of the Bureau coming and joining us, so do not be surprised if you see many new faces in the coming days." Smiling, Hayate saluted everyone again. "I'm not big on speeches, so, I'll end it with one last word. Of the new people coming in, we're going to have a small amount of trainees coming in. I will ask that, even though they are younger and less experienced than most of us, that you give them an honest chance." When no one said anything, Hayate nodded at them. "Dismissed."

(---)

Later in the day...

Hayate sighed as she sat behind her desk and groaned softly. "Gods, I feel tired." She looked up as there was a knock on the door. "Come in."

"Hayate..." Hayate's eyes lit up as she saw Reinforce walk in, dressed in a similar outfit to what Hayate wore. "I take it that the morning meeting went well?"

"Yes, but I've been up for almost thirty hours straight." Hayate sighed softly. "Ugh, just getting the movers to get everything right, making sure that people know what they're doing and having to do the whole meet and greet with all the new recruits, I could use a nap."

"Don't push yourself too hard..." Reinforce said to her softly. "Where is everyone else?"

"They'll be here this afternoon, actually." Hayate smiled as she saw Rein Zwei and Zafira, the latter in wolf form, walk in. "This morning was just for the base staff. We'll be getting the rest of the staff soon."

"Daddy looks like she's going to pass out." Zwei said and floated over to Hayate, patting her on the head. "You should take a nap, daddy."

Hayate blinked and wondered why she suddenly felt so groggy. "...Sleeping..." She yawned before leaning forward and passing out while resting her head on her desk.

"I don't think that Lina taught you that sleep spell for something like that, Zwei." Reinforce shook her head and walked over to Hayate and picked the small woman up. "Please tell me that you didn't make it too deep."

Zwei shook her head. "Nah uh. Daddy was really tired, I used just enough to make a person feel like yawning."

Reinforce nodded as she carried Hayate over to the couch and put her down on it. "Very well, but, please, refrain from that in the future."

"Okay, mommy." Zwei saluted her mother while giving her a determined look. "...Will daddy be mad at me?"

"A little upset, but not angry, I think." Reinforce smiled at her daughter.

"Besides," Zafira spoke up and looked at the small device, "like you said, Hayate was pretty tired, a couple of hours of sleep won't hurt her."

Reinforce nodded and looked back at Hayate. "Until Hayate wakes up, I'll be in charge, do either of you have a problem with that?" They both shook their heads and Reinforce nodded to them. Thankfully, being in charge today was mostly just making sure that people knew what to do later.

Most everyone was a professional anyway, so it wouldn't be a problem.

Walking over to the desk, Reinforce raised an eyebrow. "Missions, already?" She narrowed her eyes at them and sighed heavily. "Looks like we won't get much time to get together today. There's a few scouting missions that are requested, and one to deal with some criminals and they need extra fire power."

"How dangerous?"

"Not very." Reinforce shook her head. "Just small time thugs, but they're holed up pretty good. Just some extra firepower to draw them out is needed."

"Zaffy and I can go." Rein Zwei saluted her mother. "Zaffy won't let me get hurt and I'll punish the bad guys."

Reinforce smiled lightly. "Very well, be careful out there you two."

They both nodded and Zafira turned to walk away and smiled to himself as he felt Zwei land on his back as he walked out.

Reinforce waited until they were gone before closing her eyes. "Vita, are you somewhere close?"

"GAH! Mom, what do you want?"

Reinforce smiled at the title, but continued. "Just where are you at?"

"...Um... Not out partying again?"

"...Vita, I swear, if you're hanging out at a club again, you'll be in such trouble..."

"I was just listening to the music. I swear, that's all. I wasn't looking for anything else." Vita's voice sounded sincere, so Reinforce decided to drop it at that moment. "I was just relaxing until I needed to show up. Something wrong?"

"While I trust them, I'd feel better if you were with Zwei and Zafira, they went to help subdue some criminals and I worry about them."

"Not a problem, I'll head out right away." Vita cut the communication there.

(---)

"Sorry guys, I gotta go." Vita gave a small salute to the people at the dance club, most of whom all groaned in dismay. "Hey, family first, you know." She rolled her eyes as she threw on a leather jacket and ran out the door, nodding to the bouncer. "Keep up the good work, Bill."

The bouncer smiled at her. "You're always welcome back here anytime, Vita."

Grinning, the busty redhead ran out of the dance hall and grimaced slightly. "...Why are dance halls open all day and night anyway?" She asked herself before frowning slightly. "Hey, mom, where is..." Vita nodded to herself as Reinforce gave her some directions before turning and running off in that direction. Even if she was restricted for flight in the city, she was still faster on foot than anyone besides Fate.

Vita stopped at a corner and grinned as she came across a motorcycle. 'Course, having one of these babies is just awesome.' It had taken her years of saving money, looking for deals and doing special favors to finally get a motorcycle, but it had been worth it in the end. Tossing on the helmet, she dropped the visor and got on the bike, turning it on and grinning as the engine roared to life. "Alright!"

While nothing could beat flying, this was a pretty close second in Vita's opinion.

(---)

Less than an hour later...

Vita arrived, somewhat grumpily, at the scene of several police cars in front of a two-story warehouse before nodding as she got off her bike after parking it and walking over to the captain before pulling her helmet off. "Bureau Captain Vita Yagami reporting in. What's the situation?"

"It's well in hand, ma'am." The captain saluted her. "Just moments ago, Sergeant Major Rein Zwei Yagami and Zafira Yagami showed up and went inside, and well..."

Vita looked up and sweat-dropped as a man was blown out of the window while crackling with lightning. "...Someone said she was a midget again." Vita shook her head and chuckled heavily. Her sister wasn't too forgiving when someone called her that.

"Is she like this very often?"

"Only if you call her a midget or try and take her food." Vita shook her head as another body came out, this time it was encased in a thin layer of ice. "She's not likely to kill them though, unless they somehow hurt Zafira." Zwei was so protective of her family that it would be cute if it wasn't for the fact that she was probably capable of re-writing local weather patterns when she got upset if she tried hard enough.

"And that's for trying to say that I was smaller than a nugget!" Zwei yelled as she floated out of the broken window, Zafira, still in wolf form, followed her, dragging five other, unconscious men out after him. "Sis!" Zwei spotted Vita instantly and flew over to her, trying, and failing, due to how small her tiny unison body was, to hug the redhead's breasts completely. "How are you? You don't smell funny today."

Vita sweat-dropped at the looks she was getting. "I'm fine, mom wanted me to make sure that you and Zafira were okay." She blushed as Zafira looked at her while dropping the chained up men in front of the police. "Hey, I was clear on the other side of Cranagan, it took me nearly forty minutes to get out here."

"I didn't say anything." Zafira mentioned to her telepathically.

Vita just rolled her eyes and looked at the police captain, who was grinning at her, Zwei and Zafira. "We done, captain?"

He nodded at her. "Yep. If need a statement from you, we'll give you a call."

Vita smiled at him. "Cool. Zafira, Zwei, want a ride?"

Zwei grinned and nodded. "Uh huh!" Before Vita could say anything, Zwei flew up Vita's shirt sleeve before sliding into position between her large, comfortable breasts. "Ahhh!"

Vita felt like slapping herself in the face, but just shook her head, put her helmet on and got on the bike as Zafira turned back into human form and got on behind her. "A tank top and jeans?"

Zafira snorted at her and grabbed her side as she started up the bike and took off towards the new headquarters.

Spoiler for Comments:

I figured that if Fate, Nanoha, Signum and Shamal all have cars by now, why can't Vita have a motorcycle?

Also, if anyone knows how to describe Priss's motorcycle from Bubblegum Crisis, please, let me know, I'm drawing on that for Vita's bike here.

Me: StrikerS arc! YAH!!!!

Odin: Don't mind the moron for a while, he just woken up from a solid hit to the head.

Me: Cause you bashed me with a warhammer, Odin.

Val: Jeez... Did anyone ordered Zwei to act like Edward Elric when someone imply that she's short?

Me: At least she's not as busty as Eins and acts like Tear from "Tales of the Abyss"...

Val: Or eat alot of pizza from Pizza Hut and pretty much act like a witch.

Sarah: Vita in the rebellious teen phase... This spell trouble for her and her family if she got caught up between peer and family situation.

Me: And Priss' bike... from what version coz' I only watched the one showed around the 1990+...

[Craxuan]

At long last, it is time... my presentation is over, it is time...

*deep breathes, enters writer mode*

[biodude711]

Originally Posted by Craxuan

At long last, it is time... my presentation is over, it is time...

*deep breathes, enters writer mode*

Hammer time?

[mega1987]

Originally Posted by biodude711

hammer time?

gooldionnnnn cccrruuussshhhheeeerrrrrr!!!!!!!!

[Tiresias]

Originally Posted by Craxuan

Uh, I could never imagine CnC together with Nanoha no matter what. Nanoha is already pretty idealistic in its own way, but CnC is just off the scales; no matter how military it tries to be I can never get serious with the game...

Oh, I completely understand that there would be some reservations with meshing the two setting, and everyone of us has our own favorite aspects about Nanoha, and I certainly won't force anybody to read it...but to say that a Nanoha story has to be idealistic? I...am pretty sure that the opening is rather tame compared to some other works out there like Kaijo's Future Tense and Atomicox's...pretty much his entire stories, I think . (not that I think darker Nanoha stories are always bad)

Originally Posted by Lycodrake

Also, if we go by CnC mechanics or rules, Hayate and Nanoha would pretty much be OP, Hayate because of her AoE attacks, and Nanoha because of Starlight Breaker.

Oh, she would certainly be one of the most powerful field assets in the area, and GDI definitely appreciates their little Magical Ion Cannon Girl - she is pretty much Space Marine amongst Imperial Guardsmen, but...isn't that how she goes in canon, anyway? A grunt mage would never win against her one-on-one, nor would a Gadget Drones, but wars are never won with just elites, and there are far more redshirts and mooks than there are your hero characters.

Besides, people seem to forget that while Starlight Breaker is her most iconic spell, it's not what she slugs away at the beginning of the fight, no that goes to her Shooters and Busters. SLB is not something she fires every second . And a smart commander would react to SLB the same way they react to artillery barrages - by spreading out. They would suffer losses yes, but to say that they got one-shot killed is not quite correct.

[Craxuan]

What I meant was the canon Nanoha series was a world following thoroughly an 'ideal' concept, that is an 'ideal' world.

Atomicox's writing actually came pretty close to some of my imaginations, really, which was a shock when I went through his apocalypse. Certainly there are differences, but... Wow! Almost fell into that tempting sinkhole of peer reviewing...

[Filraen]

Originally Posted by Nanya01

StrikerS...

GO!

Peek's Mini-Arcs:

Yagami Mid Four Dwell Takamachi Scrya Fatherhood Harlaown Dreams Dance Healing Twins Advice History Onwards Cycle Playdate Forging Meetings Search Valkyrie News Coda

BTF Omakes:

Old Iron Omakes 1, 2, 3 Mr Snuggles Omake Oh Bandit Tree Old Iron Omakes 4, 5

Spoiler for Blood That Flows - StrikerS Start:

Hayate, dressed in a brown mini-skirt military outfit smiled and saluted at the preliminary staff of the new Riot Force group. "Morning, everyone." She said from her position on top of a small stage.

"Morning." The group said as one.

"As you know, this is the first official meeting of the new Riot Force group. As it stands, we are an experimental group that was formed to be able to move freely without red tape clogging us down, as well as the ability to respond to any sort of crisis, regardless if it's Ground Forces, Navy or Air Force that would take care of it normally. Because of the large amount of staff that will be here right away, we are also tasked with the policing of various Lost Logia that are smuggled through Cranagan. The Bureau will continue to police Lost Logia as normal, so we only have to deal with any that happens here, or if we run into them while on a mission." She fought the urge to smile as the various staff members nodded their heads. "Keep in mind, that not all of the staff is here yet. Over the next couple of weeks, there will be other members of the Bureau coming and joining us, so do not be surprised if you see many new faces in the coming days." Smiling, Hayate saluted everyone again. "I'm not big on speeches, so, I'll end it with one last word. Of the new people coming in, we're going to have a small amount of trainees coming in. I will ask that, even though they are younger and less experienced than most of us, that you give them an honest chance." When no one said anything, Hayate nodded at them. "Dismissed."

(---)

Later in the day...

Hayate sighed as she sat behind her desk and groaned softly. "Gods, I feel tired." She looked up as there was a knock on the door. "Come in."

"Hayate..." Hayate's eyes lit up as she saw Reinforce walk in, dressed in a similar outfit to what Hayate wore. "I take it that the morning meeting went well?"

"Yes, but I've been up for almost thirty hours straight." Hayate sighed softly. "Ugh, just getting the movers to get everything right, making sure that people know what they're doing and having to do the whole meet and greet with all the new recruits, I could use a nap."

"Don't push yourself too hard..." Reinforce said to her softly. "Where is everyone else?"

"They'll be here this afternoon, actually." Hayate smiled as she saw Rein Zwei and Zafira, the latter in wolf form, walk in. "This morning was just for the base staff. We'll be getting the rest of the staff soon."

"Daddy looks like she's going to pass out." Zwei said and floated over to Hayate, patting her on the head. "You should take a nap, daddy."

Hayate blinked and wondered why she suddenly felt so groggy. "...Sleeping..." She yawned before leaning forward and passing out while resting her head on her desk.

"I don't think that Lina taught you that sleep spell for something like that, Zwei." Reinforce shook her head and walked over to Hayate and picked the small woman up. "Please tell me that you didn't make it too deep."

Zwei shook her head. "Nah uh. Daddy was really tired, I used just enough to make a person feel like yawning."

Reinforce nodded as she carried Hayate over to the couch and put her down on it. "Very well, but, please, refrain from that in the future."

"Okay, mommy." Zwei saluted her mother while giving her a determined look. "...Will daddy be mad at me?"

"A little upset, but not angry, I think." Reinforce smiled at her daughter.

"Besides," Zafira spoke up and looked at the small device, "like you said, Hayate was pretty tired, a couple of hours of sleep won't hurt her."

Reinforce nodded and looked back at Hayate. "Until Hayate wakes up, I'll be in charge, do either of you have a problem with that?" They both shook their heads and Reinforce nodded to them. Thankfully, being in charge today was mostly just making sure that people knew what to do later.

Most everyone was a professional anyway, so it wouldn't be a problem.

Walking over to the desk, Reinforce raised an eyebrow. "Missions, already?" She narrowed her eyes at them and sighed heavily. "Looks like we won't get much time to get together today. There's a few scouting missions that are requested, and one to deal with some criminals and they need extra fire power."

"How dangerous?"

"Not very." Reinforce shook her head. "Just small time thugs, but they're holed up pretty good. Just some extra firepower to draw them out is needed."

"Zaffy and I can go." Rein Zwei saluted her mother. "Zaffy won't let me get hurt and I'll punish the bad guys."

Reinforce smiled lightly. "Very well, be careful out there you two."

They both nodded and Zafira turned to walk away and smiled to himself as he felt Zwei land on his back as he walked out.

Reinforce waited until they were gone before closing her eyes. "Vita, are you somewhere close?"

"GAH! Mom, what do you want?"

Reinforce smiled at the title, but continued. "Just where are you at?"

"...Um... Not out partying again?"

"...Vita, I swear, if you're hanging out at a club again, you'll be in such trouble..."

"I was just listening to the music. I swear, that's all. I wasn't looking for anything else." Vita's voice sounded sincere, so Reinforce decided to drop it at that moment. "I was just relaxing until I needed to show up. Something wrong?"

"While I trust them, I'd feel better if you were with Zwei and Zafira, they went to help subdue some criminals and I worry about them."

"Not a problem, I'll head out right away." Vita cut the communication there.

(---)

"Sorry guys, I gotta go." Vita gave a small salute to the people at the dance club, most of whom all groaned in dismay. "Hey, family first, you know." She rolled her eyes as she threw on a leather jacket and ran out the door, nodding to the bouncer. "Keep up the good work, Bill."

The bouncer smiled at her. "You're always welcome back here anytime, Vita."

Grinning, the busty redhead ran out of the dance hall and grimaced slightly. "...Why are dance halls open all day and night anyway?" She asked herself before frowning slightly. "Hey, mom, where is..." Vita nodded to herself as Reinforce gave her some directions before turning and running off in that direction. Even if she was restricted for flight in the city, she was still faster on foot than anyone besides Fate.

Vita stopped at a corner and grinned as she came across a motorcycle. 'Course, having one of these babies is just awesome.' It had taken her years of saving money, looking for deals and doing special favors to finally get a motorcycle, but it had been worth it in the end. Tossing on the helmet, she dropped the visor and got on the bike, turning it on and grinning as the engine roared to life. "Alright!"

While nothing could beat flying, this was a pretty close second in Vita's opinion.

(---)

Less than an hour later...

Vita arrived, somewhat grumpily, at the scene of several police cars in front of a two-story warehouse before nodding as she got off her bike after parking it and walking over to the captain before pulling her helmet off. "Bureau Captain Vita Yagami reporting in. What's the situation?"

"It's well in hand, ma'am." The captain saluted her. "Just moments ago, Sergeant Major Rein Zwei Yagami and Zafira Yagami showed up and went inside, and well..."

Vita looked up and sweat-dropped as a man was blown out of the window while crackling with lightning. "...Someone said she was a midget again." Vita shook her head and chuckled heavily. Her sister wasn't too forgiving when someone called her that.

"Is she like this very often?"

"Only if you call her a midget or try and take her food." Vita shook her head as another body came out, this time it was encased in a thin layer of ice. "She's not likely to kill them though, unless they somehow hurt Zafira." Zwei was so protective of her family that it would be cute if it wasn't for the fact that she was probably capable of re-writing local weather patterns when she got upset if she tried hard enough.

"And that's for trying to say that I was smaller than a nugget!" Zwei yelled as she floated out of the broken window, Zafira, still in wolf form, followed her, dragging five other, unconscious men out after him. "Sis!" Zwei spotted Vita instantly and flew over to her, trying, and failing, due to how small her tiny unison body was, to hug the redhead's breasts completely. "How are you? You don't smell funny today."

Vita sweat-dropped at the looks she was getting. "I'm fine, mom wanted me to make sure that you and Zafira were okay." She blushed as Zafira looked at her while dropping the chained up men in front of the police. "Hey, I was clear on the other side of Cranagan, it took me nearly forty minutes to get out here."

"I didn't say anything." Zafira mentioned to her telepathically.

Vita just rolled her eyes and looked at the police captain, who was grinning at her, Zwei and Zafira. "We done, captain?"

He nodded at her. "Yep. If need a statement from you, we'll give you a call."

Vita smiled at him. "Cool. Zafira, Zwei, want a ride?"

Zwei grinned and nodded. "Uh huh!" Before Vita could say anything, Zwei flew up Vita's shirt sleeve before sliding into position between her large, comfortable breasts. "Ahhh!"

Vita felt like slapping herself in the face, but just shook her head, put her helmet on and got on the bike as Zafira turned back into human form and got on behind her. "A tank top and jeans?"

Zafira snorted at her and grabbed her side as she started up the bike and took off towards the new headquarters.

Spoiler for Comments:

I figured that if Fate, Nanoha, Signum and Shamal all have cars by now, why can't Vita have a motorcycle?

Also, if anyone knows how to describe Priss's motorcycle from Bubblegum Crisis, please, let me know, I'm drawing on that for Vita's bike here.

Are you making Zwei's full first name "Rein Zwei" here? Because if she's adressed by rank+name then it's strange to see "Sergeant Major Rein Zwei Yagami" (instead of "Sergeant Major Reinforce Zwei Yagami").

[Nanya01]

Originally Posted by Filraen

Are you making Zwei's full first name "Rein Zwei" here? Because if she's adressed by rank+name then it's strange to see "Sergeant Major Rein Zwei Yagami" (instead of "Sergeant Major Reinforce Zwei Yagami").

Hmm... I should change that.

Got too used of saying Rein Zwei.

[Lycodrake]

Originally Posted by Nanya01

Hmm... I should change that.

Got too used of saying Rein Zwei.

Yeah, probably would be better/good. XP
Unless you like leaving us confused and eager to listen to you explain things...

[WarpObscura]

Tiresias, when in CnC canon does this take place?

[Filraen]

If even the official record forgets Rein's name, that means she is the next Osaka (Azumanga Daioh)?

[Sunder the Gold]

Only if she forgets her own name sometime thereafter.

[Lycodrake]

Where is everyone today? =w=

Also, with two Reins, it is kind of confusing. Which is why there's "Eins" and "Zwei". ^^;

[Nanya01]

I'm tired, okay?

Ugh... Six days of work this week, same with next week.

Not fun.

Holidays suck.

[Lycodrake]

Originally Posted by Nanya01

I'm tired, okay?

Ugh... Six days of work this week, same with next week.

Not fun.

Holidays suck.

I'd feel sorry for you, but I have Finals to work on and an essay to write...
But I digress, Holidays do tend to suck.

[Kuroi Hadou]

Originally Posted by Lycodrake

I'd feel sorry for you, but I have Finals to work on and an essay to write...
But I digress, Holidays do tend to suck.

Wow, just one essay? You have idea how much I envy you.

[shiroi mahotsukai]

Originally Posted by Kuroi Hadou

Wow, just one essay? You have idea how much I envy you.

I second this point. *Shudder*

[bhl88]

Material no Jikan... it's a Christmas present. Yuuno must wake up by now... that took a long time. As for Erio and Caro, they join the Materials (as substitutes for Yuuno).

Seikou: Take responsibility.
Erio: Or else what?
Yami: Or I will make you crossdress.
Erio: .... I submit. Please... no crossdressing.

[Lycodrake]

Originally Posted by Kuroi Hadou

Wow, just one essay? You have idea how much I envy you.

Originally Posted by shiroi mahotsukai

I second this point. *Shudder*

It isn't as easy as you'd think, or at least the topic...

Originally Posted by bhl88

Material no Jikan... it's a Christmas present. Yuuno must wake up by now... that took a long time. As for Erio and Caro, they join the Materials (as substitutes for Yuuno).

Seikou: Take responsibility.
Erio: Or else what?
Yami: Or I will make you crossdress.
Erio: .... I submit. Please... no crossdressing.

This made me rofl. XD

[GaelicDragon]

Originally Posted by bhl88

Material no Jikan... it's a Christmas present. Yuuno must wake up by now... that took a long time. As for Erio and Caro, they join the Materials (as substitutes for Yuuno).

Seikou: Take responsibility.
Erio: Or else what?
Yami: Or I will make you crossdress.
Erio: .... I submit. Please... no crossdressing.

Umm....

Wrong fic...Your think of Material Days.

Material no Jikan is Raiser's fic where Yuuno is raising the Materials.

of course, I will admit to misreading the title once..."Materials no Chikan" sent Nanya into a fit of laughter.