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Old 2012-01-18, 04:53   Link #18521
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@ Demi - Just started my term, so no tests for me I'm stuck on daydreams now, though. I'm making it more serious and splitting it to two chapters.

@ Jak - New fanfic ideas?
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Old 2012-01-18, 04:59   Link #18522
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@eras: Well it's good that you're taking daydreams more seriously now, but don't pressure yourself too much. Sometimes you get so caught up in capturing certain details you forget other parts
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Old 2012-01-18, 05:01   Link #18523
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@ Demi - The fight extends when Tatenashi questions his will to fight and why he's not doing everything to win against her. This causes him to take the fight more seriously and he headbutts her to get out of her grapple
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Old 2012-01-18, 05:04   Link #18524
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Because Ichika can't brawl against women. He would have beaten her in V5 if she didn't flash him. Plus I'm not sure why you want to reinforce the need for Ichika to win.
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Old 2012-01-18, 05:06   Link #18525
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@stratos: time diver?
Super Robot Wars basically.

If I'm not wrong, Time Divers is a term for a group of people who travel between alternate dimensions.

Also, another scene...Part of it anyways:
Spoiler for Scene:
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Old 2012-01-18, 05:07   Link #18526
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uh....he doesn't win He just puts up a better fight before going down. Tatenashi asks him how he can protect his friends when he holds back so much. This made him fight more seriously.

Side note - You think Ichika could've beaten her? Laura couldn't beat her.
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Old 2012-01-18, 05:08   Link #18527
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@eras: I can imagine Ichika looking away and saying something like "But I can't fight you." or "You're one of the people I want to protect." even "You're not the enemy."

@stratos: Wow O.o
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Old 2012-01-18, 05:10   Link #18528
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That's the problem : Ichika asked to spar with her to get better, but he doesn't even go all out? it makes it all pointless and Tatenashi points this out.
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Old 2012-01-18, 05:12   Link #18529
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break the hero?
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Old 2012-01-18, 05:14   Link #18530
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Not really. Ichika admits that he shouldn't hesitate to ask his friends for help and even says that he'll get to the point where he can beat her in a fight. Tatenashi makes remarks about him turning into a guy she can fall in love with and he starts stuttering again.
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Old 2012-01-18, 05:14   Link #18531
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can you actually imagine that happening?
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Old 2012-01-18, 05:16   Link #18532
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Hell no I can't! This is why Daydreams is a pain in the ass to write By the way, this is just her daydream. the real version has Ichika getting the tar kicked out of him and he wasn't even holding back The canon version, basically.
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Old 2012-01-18, 05:20   Link #18533
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what's the best case scenario you can think of?
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Old 2012-01-18, 05:21   Link #18534
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The best case scenario? He gets the tar kicked out of him and they eat dinner afterwards. The Daydream about the sushi happens afterwards.
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Old 2012-01-18, 05:24   Link #18535
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@eras: skip the part about Ichika beating Tatenashi. Most likely you really can't relate to it so you find it hard to write. Or if you really want that scene then ask a more experienced writer to help you visualize and put it down.
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Old 2012-01-18, 05:26   Link #18536
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Um...didn't I say that he doesn't beat Tatenashi? I just changed it from "Gets the crap beaten out of him" to "Fights back before getting the crap beaten out of him".
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Old 2012-01-18, 05:28   Link #18537
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hmmm... then same advice only change the part about beating Tatenashi to about fighting back better.
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Old 2012-01-18, 05:30   Link #18538
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So....her ideal version of Ichika in her daydream is a guy who continously gets the crap beaten out of him? I don't want to write the fight scene to be completely honest, but that seems kinda odd.
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Old 2012-01-18, 05:32   Link #18539
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I doubt she's actively looking at a guy's combat ability to decide whether he's dating material or not. Rather I think she finds Ichika to be honestly reliable. He's not quite as good as she wants him to be yet, but she's sure he'll reach that level she wants soon.
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Old 2012-01-18, 05:33   Link #18540
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My advice: Have Ichika try again, and again, and again....

And then finally win the fight for the first time.

You just have to write one fight, the rest can be described with exposition, also, small quote how Ichika won against her. Better: a cool one liner.
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