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Old 2012-05-15, 11:19   Link #36421
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Thank you both.

Spoiler for sneak peak 2:


Edited. Thanks Crax.

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Old 2012-05-15, 11:41   Link #36422
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Use 'belongs' instead.

The dialogues' grammar is fine, but you should make everything else not-dialogue in past tense.

EDIT: Btw the one you're asking about? We are following a tone there, "Hearts are not to be bought but stolen, they say" is the more proper one. The one I posted earlier follows more precisely to the actual wording (you would kinda pause a bit at 'bought') though it looks weird in writing. Or just two ways of speech.
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Old 2012-05-15, 11:44   Link #36423
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Edited. Thanks Crax.
What do you think? It is too cheesy?
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Old 2012-05-15, 11:48   Link #36424
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There's no such thing as too cheesy. People claim my stuff to be too dramatic, but heck, when I write I want my story to shake the world (kinda), and MLGN simply LOVES to be dramatic - the characters are very naive that they word out their feelings a lot more clearly and easily than in real life, something that I has always loved about this anime.
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Old 2012-05-15, 18:57   Link #36425
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Old 2012-05-15, 19:38   Link #36426
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Me: Must be in the genes.... *points at Luna's attempt on casting Rune Flare with the sword of light.*

Odin: At least it's not 17,280 missiles converging into one area just to blow up a few targets.

Elane: What's wrong making sure those guys stay dead?

Odin: Waste of ammunition for later use.

Val: And the Numbers are in the house... Except for Due unless Lutecia decided to join the fray to help her friends...

Sarah: I say Due need some bodyguard training if that happens.

Reia: Chaotic Disintegrate... Nice AOE spell... heavy damage to an area with minimal effects to the surroundings.

Jill: Why these THINGS keep on coming!? *Shot a Mariage with her magnum.*

Leon:Watch out!! *Blasted a group of Mariages near Jill with a RPG before spraying Claire's flank with his SMG.*

Claire: We didn't have THIS problems when we go against Umbrella. *Covered Jill and Leon with her own pair of mini-SMG.*

Odin: Ignore the lost souls who end up fighting the Mariages atm...

Reia: At least those things are no Einst or they're gonna have problems with numbers AND regeneration.

*Suddenly a group of Einst Kaguya appeared and got attacked by the Mariages.*

Val: *Flat look at Reia.* You have to open your mouth, Rei....
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Old 2012-05-17, 00:24   Link #36427
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The tangent

Spoiler for AIM Tangent:


Just a tangent created on AIM while talking with Old Iron. Something I tend to to when discussing ideas some times. Might take a few reads to figure out who is talking, just for a warning.
I blame GD for this...
Spoiler for spoiler:
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Old 2012-05-17, 01:41   Link #36428
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Are the characters involved meant not to be known?
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Old 2012-05-17, 01:52   Link #36429
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NOt really. I just followed GD's example.
THe 1st conversation is between Leti and Lindy.
Next is 1 of the NumberS (Either Wendi or Nove) with Leti
The last one is at Ginga's 20 birthday.
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Old 2012-05-17, 03:20   Link #36430
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Ah, I see...

Maybe I should stop reading those if I want my mind to be clear when editing/doing my fanfics
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Old 2012-05-17, 13:45   Link #36431
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I deleted "One Half and Eleven" from my FF.net account for revision and expansion.
(Posting this mainly to give Nanya a heads-up, but also inform those that care...if anyone.)
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Old 2012-05-17, 19:41   Link #36432
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Well, damn. Was thiking of checking it out.
Lyco, what do you think of my recent posts.
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Old 2012-05-17, 20:19   Link #36433
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Here's the weekly update
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Notes for those who are reading the version here: Some words have been changed but they did not affect the story so I won't post the changes here.

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Old 2012-05-17, 20:32   Link #36434
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Well, I just want to say, All straight pair suck.
Because the pretty woman of Nanoha should stay with other pretty woman to have a more
pretty combination.
Also, straight doujin suck, I hope destroy them in one moment
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Old 2012-05-17, 20:35   Link #36435
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Please don't start another pairing flame war.
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Old 2012-05-17, 20:38   Link #36436
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... To each their own, Kitsu. Also, why are you posting it here?
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Old 2012-05-17, 20:39   Link #36437
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... To each their own, Kitsu. Also, why are you posting it here?
Better here than in that ONE thread that no one wants opened up again.
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Old 2012-05-17, 21:06   Link #36438
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*blink* Which one?
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Old 2012-05-17, 22:43   Link #36439
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*blink* Which one?
I'd rather not say, people will go looking for it then.

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Old 2012-05-17, 23:08   Link #36440
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I'd rather not say, people will go looking for it then.

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Me: Is it me or those Mariages' logic reminds me of those extremist...

Odin: Like Muruta Azrael And Patrick Zala?

Reia: Vindel Mauser?

Val: Juno, Sera, before she realize her course of action is a mistake, and Sigma?

Iris: Gilbert Durandal and Djibril?

Mariemeia: Those dummies who think IP/CR can innovate the world?

Me: *sweatdrops* Nevermind...

Odin: Anyways... *pulls out the Mariage's head that got punt by Subaru's punch.* How it feels to get you noggin shaken beyond it's normal limit and don't bother self-destructing. Your pretty little head got treated with some nanites that will cancel that special protocol of yours.

Mariage's head: You shall fall before our might, Human.

Odin: *Raised Eyebrow.* To play soccer, *Drops the Mariage's head before kicking it with a Beowulf empowered kick away.* or not to play. That is the question for today. And who said that I'm completely human in the first place?

Mariemeia: Lame joke, Odin.

Reia: I really hope Ixy will have some control over those mariages at the end, together that she will not sleep for another set of eons...

Char: No one mention my actions During the 2nd Neo-Zeon revolt?

Ribbon: Nor mine?

Odin: We kinda forgot back there....*sarcasm mode.*

Char and Ribbon:
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