Total Eclipse/Muv-Luv - FanFiction Discussion

[kaizerknight01]

thats after sodogishima arc I think well suppose she attracted to Shirogane via mysterious nature/ save her for being head chomped/ many variables

[John117xCortana]

How old is she ?

[Von Himmel]

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7112821/57
Another chapter is up. I wonder what happened in this chapter..

[kaizerknight01]

Originally Posted by Von Himmel

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7112821/57
Another chapter is up. I wonder what happened in this chapter..

shit just hit the fan ......

[John117xCortana]

He wants to burn Japan down so that he can rule whatever thats left ?

[MrTerrorist]

Well good luck with that. Once the BETA invades again, let's see how that Japanese Warrior spirit helps them when they just wasted everything in the coup.

[Wild Goose]

For all the talk of evil americans, while the CIA are assholes America as a whole is being ruthlessly pragmatic in taking care of its interests and fighting BETA. Contrast that to the Japanese... *shakes head*

Which is why it still bugs me that the yanks never loaded orbital diver pods with FAE bombs or nukes. -__-

[Sheba]

I dunno from what I remember from Alternative, Ikaruga don't strike me as that retarded.

[Von Himmel]

Regardless, now that the emperor is now dead, the system of Japan will change and I hope there wouldn't be anymore of that Japanese pride, 'For the Shogun/Emperor/etc' or anything like that anymore since they'll get usurped into UN... I think?

I dunno from what I remember from Alternative, Ikaruga don't strike me as that retarded.

This is what irks me in this arc ;( I don't know what's his real personality is since I haven't played TDA yet, but his psychopath side really turned me off.

[Wild Goose]

I'm reminded of what a certain butler once said: Some men just want to watch the world burn.

To be fair, Ikaruga looks like he's working to fuck up whatever Yuuhi's planning on doing in TDA...

[kaizerknight01]

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

For all the talk of evil americans, while the CIA are assholes America as a whole is being ruthlessly pragmatic in taking care of its interests and fighting BETA. Contrast that to the Japanese... *shakes head*

Which is why it still bugs me that the yanks never loaded orbital diver pods with FAE bombs or nukes. -__-

well the impression that i get in alternative is US is the lesser good , than the lesser evil, with the alt V supporters and extremist taking hold in both US and UN higher echelons , case of of anti alternative group on the raise .... and weapon manufacturing company having their on agenda , Cia etc

As for the misguided Yamato Damash (Patriotism) ..... Those morons just want a place die in the false glory of there ideals, which wasted precious time and wasted lives ..... Then we get the five royal houses and the "regency" which decides who's going to be next shogun more back stabbing ..... all that i can said the back door politics is quite extreme

[black knight iust]

question for u guys who would win flood (halo universe) or beta cause i think the flood would bring out new units aka use the dead bodys of beta

[NorthernFallout]

So I abandoned my fic for a while and then decided to get back to it. It's been expanded with a small prologue and the first chapter has been slightly rewritten to fit the prologue, along with some polishing, so I'm reposting it. Chapter 2 is basically done as well, though it hasn't undergone any beta'ing.

I acknowledge the prologue might have benefited from another PoV... but as I have other projects to focus on I need to finish this one in its entirety.

The final chapter should be done soon-ish.

Prologue

Chapter 1

Chapter 2

[Hagoshod]

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8314408/1/A-Cadets-Account
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8314408/2/A-Cadets-Account

I have done the unthinkable.

I have actually made the first two episodes of Total Eclipse relevant.

[DoomRavager]

Originally Posted by Hagoshod

in the corner of her screen
spanning the top of her screen
appeared on her screen
every pixel on her screen
vanished from his screen

Except that TSFs don't use screens for display of HUD and outside views.

With that said, the kind of contrivance that would have to go into an Imperial Royal Guardsman nobody somehow ending up in or even accompanying a top secret UN task force that only draws from rigorously pre-screened candidates at Yokohama, on a mission where the plan explicitly arranged for them to do it alone, simply boggles the mind.

And TSFs deploying sentry turrets with bombs having yield a third of the size of a standard S-11? The XG-70's main guard unit somehow managing to end up on the "other side of the hive"? Granted, making up virtually impossible scenarios and breaking continuity willy-nilly is kind of par for the course where fanfiction in general is concerned, but.

No offense, it's your fanfiction and you're free to make up whatever you like to contrive your own preferred scenario.

By the way, the first two episodes are, in my opinion, by no means irrelevant at present, but you're entitled to your own opinion on that, since your views are already practicaly on public record at this point, and there is nothing that can be said on that topic that has not already been said.

I don't mean to be a killjoy.

[MrTerrorist]

Originally Posted by Hagoshod

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8314408/1/A-Cadets-Account
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8314408/2/A-Cadets-Account

I have done the unthinkable.

I have actually made the first two episodes of Total Eclipse relevant.

Horay! A sequel.


-after reading-


Dammit, i was hopeful that she get a happy ending. All i got was a tearjerking Heroic Sacrifice.

[Hagoshod]

Originally Posted by DoomRavager

Except that TSFs don't use screens for display of HUD and outside views.

With that said, the kind of contrivance that would have to go into an Imperial Royal Guardsman nobody somehow ending up in or even accompanying a top secret UN task force that only draws from rigorously pre-screened candidates at Yokohama, on a mission where the plan explicitly arranged for them to do it alone, simply boggles the mind.

And TSFs deploying sentry turrets with bombs having yield a third of the size of a standard S-11? The XG-70's main guard unit somehow managing to end up on the "other side of the hive"? Granted, making up virtually impossible scenarios and breaking continuity willy-nilly is kind of par for the course where fanfiction in general is concerned, but.

For simplicity's sake, a tiny holographic(ish) screen beamed directly into your eye is still a screen.

How is Izumi being on the Valkyrie Squad a problem in canon, particularly she has UN connections through Yui and Yamashiro, Yuuhi is vouching for her from the Japan side, and she's in a final offensive mission where the rest of the squad are using exchanged Royal Guard Takemis? And isn't going from the Royal Guard to a special UN team precisely what happened when Yui was assigned to Project Prominence in canon?

As for everything else...

Spoiler:

The stuff with Meiya taking longer to get to the core, and the other Valkyries splitting up and getting picked off by BETA, and Takeru being by himself during the home stretch? That's... actually exactly what happens in the game. Chizuru and Kei go out doing the Synchronized Suicide Paddle and take a fuckload of BETA with them. Tama and Mikoto get run over by a Destroyer after they take down a Barrier-class. Takeru didn't even know Tama was dead until the Superior did his "HARR HARR HERE BE MY SOLDIER-CLASS MATERIALS" thing in the core.

btw, I specifically tried to write it so you can assume all of that stuff still happens and Izumi's presence doesn't interfere with the original plot structure. She's basically Mari Makinami, if Mari had been written into Rebuild 2.0 in a way that wasn't character-derailing and retarded.

I think you're testing me because you know I'm a secondary.

[DoomRavager]

Spoiler for Alternative:

The other side of a barrier does not "the other side of the Hive" make. Meiya backtracked a bit to check on the others and ended up about one room away from Takeru as a result. Communications between the rest of the Valkyries and Takeru while separated became pretty much impossible to maintain thanks to comms disruptions from hive wall dust.

And it is a problem because the plan called for Task Force A-01 making use of quantum computer fuckery to ditch any accompanying US or UN escorts as soon as they get into the Hive so that they could pursue their own objectives, at Sumika's suggestion and Yuuko's endorsement, which should make it clear just how isolated and secret A-01's Alternative IV operations are in general even within the UN, and how Yuuko doesn't want any outside interference. A-01 was using Royal Guard Takemis because the Royal Guard unit formerly assigned to Meiya while she was a cadet and just waiting around to be formally transferred was not able to accompany A-01 into the Hive (Political shit was also involved in this), so they just handed over their Takemis to compensate because the Guards in question personally wanted to increase their chances of survival, with nothing to do with any friendly connections between the IRG as an organization and the UN.

There's also kind of a big difference between a Royal Guard liason sent to oversee a joint US-Japan project under the UN in a position of authority, and a Royal Guard for some reason being attached to an ultra top secret Alternative task force whose identities and operations are classified data with the records continuing to be sealed years after their deaths. You don't get into A-01 with 'connections' and people 'vouching' for you, you get in because you enlisted at Yokohama Base, were screened for 00 Unit potential and accepted, then graduated and transferred straight into A-01.
Also

Tama and Mikoto get run over by a Destroyer

is, to say the least, not particularly accurate, but whatever.

Originally Posted by Hagoshod

I think you're testing me because you know I'm a secondary.

No, I'm just pointing out general weirdness that I happened to notice. What does secondary status have to do with it? I'd still point it out even if you weren't. Why so insecure? Why so defensive? I did say you were free to make up whatever you like to suit your own scenario in your head.

[Hagoshod]

Not defensive.

Just suspicious.

So, anyway. What makes a 00 Unit candidate be a 00 Unit candidate?

[kaizerknight01]

well, this is help me too be inspired to write my fanfic

Spoiler for ........:

Well in play alot of anime bgm/musics while brain storming on making plot scenario