SOTM 2010 - January (Kimono/Yukata) - Entry Thread

[ganbaru]

Ch3j, there'S about only 2 seconds betweem each ''blink'' which is a rather chort period of time, 4 or 5 seconds would be better.

[White Manju Bun]

@Ch3 also the eyes move slightly downward before they blink. But I like the non blinking vers as well. I think you should stick with one animated element, either the eyes or the butterfly-things.

[LKK]

@ Manju: The side bars are super distracting for me. Every time I see the sig, my eyes are drawn to them rather than the lovely artwork between them.

[Cierra]

this is my final entry

[Frailty]

v2


did I made justice to the left side?? or not???
C&C

[ganbaru]

Marcus H, now the render look right now, which lead to the issue of the part of the tree around the text.
Frailty, I think you made ''justice to the left side'', especialy as it isn't the focus of the signature. Beside the text, I don't think it would be a good idea to change much the already present elements.

My fourth tries, I reworked again the semi-transparency area. C&C would be welcome. (I made 2 version)
first




second

Spoiler for previous version:

[Kana Futayo]

Final Entry

[Mr.Kurosaki]

Final Entry (btw still needing C&C for some improvements if I have time )

[Evil Rick]

Originally Posted by JRendell

Ok, here's V4. Pending on if there isn't any drastic feedback it might possibly be my Final Entry;

Spoiler for V3:

Hmmm... perosanlly it's up to you wich one to use, versions with or without the lighting efect looks good.

Originally Posted by White Manju Bun

First draft, c&c?

It's a good use of lights, but those sparkles around her look a bit satturated, a bit chaotic if you ask me. Try reducing the number and placing them not so close to each other.

Originally Posted by katiemirmo

Frailty - the blue light from the below is kind of out of place.

Heres V4:

C&C please.

Like it a lot better, the lights now look part of the render not over it, I really like how does this looks.

Originally Posted by Ch3i

V3

*blinks* :3 I thought the fireflies took away too much of the attention I wanted on the eyes, but now it kinda looks like a hodge podge of blinking >.< i dunno xD. C&C appreciated!

I think that the blinking efect is a bit unecesary, the glowing animation should be the main atraction to the viewers eyes, adding an extra animation may make the sig a bit un-focused. :/

Originally Posted by Marcus H.

Thanks for the comments, at least I know I'm not the only one to notice the umbrella blending into the background. xD I'll work on to it ASAP.

EDIT: Here's V3. I fixed the umbrella's edges and sharpened everything except the clouds.

Simple but efective, the trees look a bit too sharped though.

Originally Posted by Frailty

v2


did I made justice to the left side?? or not???
C&C

I think the left side is filled properly, like how does this looks.

Originally Posted by ganbaru

Marcus H, now the render look right now, which lead to the issue of the part of the tree around the text.
Frailty, I think you made ''justice to the left side'', especialy as it isn't the focus of the signature. Beside the text, I don't think it would be a good idea to change much the already present elements.

My fourth tries, I reworked again the semi-transparency area. C&C would be welcome. (I made 2 version)
first




second

Spoiler for previous version:

The semi transárent areas don't work out very well ganbaru, the square is still notisable and it looks more af is the sig has some script damage, a good smudge work may be the solution here.

Originally Posted by Mr.Kurosaki

Final Entry (btw still needing C&C for some improvements if I have time )

I personally don't think it needs to be changed, looks good this way.

[Marcus H.]

My final entry. C&C still welcome. :P

[katiemirmo]

FINAL ENTRY:

[ganbaru]

Originally Posted by Evil Rick

The semi transárent areas don't work out very well ganbaru, the square is still notisable and it looks more af is the sig has some script damage, a good smudge work may be the solution here.

I would have done it if the sig was in one piece insted of 8, but usualy I don't have this much difference betweem PNG24 and JPEG slices with my oval sig...
I wanted to increase the quality of the JPEG file hoping than it would help, so I tried a few things for getting the KB for doing it. C&C would be very welcome:
5th version (4 slices, more JPEG area ):



6th version (11 slices, more empty/gif slices ):

[Preacher]

And Bonus: http://img109.imageshack.us/img109/4586/neu1x.gif

Originally Posted by JRendell

This is V3;

Spoiler for V2:

Any thoughts?

This one so far my favorite in this topic.

[Endrance]

First attempt...Havent really thought of any text




C+C appreciated

[LKK]

@ Endrance: The animation speed is too fast for my tastes. It doesn't feel natural. (My first reaction was that the rocks were blinking like a billboard marquee. )

[Evil Rick]

Originally Posted by ganbaru

I would have done it if the sig was in one piece insted of 8, but usualy I don't have this much difference betweem PNG24 and JPEG slices with my oval sig...
I wanted to increase the quality of the JPEG file hoping than it would help, so I tried a few things for getting the KB for doing it. C&C would be very welcome:
5th version (4 slices, more JPEG area ):



6th version (11 slices, more empty/gif slices ):

I would go for V6, but I would get rid of the transparent efect at the botom right side and leave it as a square.

Originally Posted by Endrance

First attempt...Havent really thought of any text




C+C appreciated

The animation looks a bit rough, kinda forced if you ask me, doesn't apply very well with the visual aspect of the sig.

[ganbaru]

Endrance as previously said, the animation need some work ( I guess than the rock seem to move because of the refraction , right ? )

Originally Posted by Evil Rick

I would go for V6, but I would get rid of the transparent efect at the botom right side and leave it as a square.

I reworked 2 version form the idea of version 6, C&C would be welcome :
V7 ,the botom like V6 but reworked:




V7, the botom square,

[White Manju Bun]

Second draft, took out the dark dots, tried spreading out the white ones, made the border smaller. C&C?


For comparison

Spoiler for first draft:

[LKK]

@ Manju: The second version is a definite improvement. The side bars aren't as distracting and neither are the dots. Too bad that you can't enter two entries because I'm lovin' that new sig of yours and it fits the theme so nicely.

Edit:
Speaking of entries, I suppose it's about time I tried a submittal. It took me a long time to figure out what I wanted to do with the surrounding screen space. But here's what I came up with.

version 1



Comments?

[ganbaru]

White Manjy Bun your second draw is better , just enough wihite dots and the smaller border... I can't see what you would have to change for now.
LKK, I am not a big fan of the font, otherwise is a nice entry.