2013-12-28, 22:37 | Link #49641 |
Lumine Passio
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Join Date: Jul 2013
Location: Hanoi, Vietnam
Age: 18
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Simple! Making her helping Ichika because of her own extra hard homeworks that she gave him: Remember and improvise style of every Mondo Grosso Champions, including herself. And in the end, she had to nurse his maimed body, due to exessive duel.
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2013-12-29, 04:31 | Link #49644 | |
Fear the Spear
Join Date: Oct 2013
Location: Osaka Castle
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2013-12-29, 05:44 | Link #49646 |
Lumine Passio
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Join Date: Jul 2013
Location: Hanoi, Vietnam
Age: 18
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*The Four Symbols
Azure Dragon of the East: Tatenashi Sarashiki Vermillion Bird of the South: Houki Shinonono White Tiger of the West: Lingyin Huang Black Turtle of the North: Kanzashi Sarashiki The Four Aces Ace of Spade: Natasha Fairs Ace of Diamond: Cecilia Alcott Ace of Heart: Charlotte Dunois Ace of Club: Laura Bodewig "...So, Ichika-san, in which type do you belong?" "None! Simply say, I've escaped the Living Cycle of Human and maybe God, to archived Kanzen Chowa (Perfect Harmony). For I'm...the Sol in human form." ...Yeah, the idea of Ichika and 9 girls remind me of the old Chinese Saga of Houyi. You may ask "Then who could shot down the nine suns and left only one?" Chifuyu, of course. |
2013-12-29, 08:04 | Link #49647 | |
Lumine Passio
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Join Date: Jul 2013
Location: Hanoi, Vietnam
Age: 18
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2013-12-29, 08:48 | Link #49648 | |
I am no one
Join Date: Apr 2010
Location: Inside your head
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2013-12-29, 09:21 | Link #49650 |
L'anticipation du pouvoir
Join Date: Jun 2013
Location: Nowhere and everywhere
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@ Fireminer
Your draft reminded me of something I wrote long ago. I wanted to write a story in the world of fairy tales... In my story, Chifuyu is the General of the capital city, Ichika is a ronnin searching for someone or something and Madoka is a ninja who wants to bring back her brother. Mentioned brother who don't want at all to come back and face Chifuyu's fury.
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2013-12-29, 09:55 | Link #49652 |
That one guy
Join Date: Nov 2011
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Ichika: who... Are you?
Girl in white: I am PROPHET. I am a sentient core that has fused with a human girl. This body that you see now is merely the form I borrowed from her. Ichika: what? Borrowed body? Are you some kind of parasite? Let her go now! PROPHET: you may call our relation anything you wish. But do not worry, this arrangement has been done with consent. And as per the contract, no harm shall come to this body. Now Orimura Ichika, you have had questions. I now appear before you with answers. Ichika:... PROPHET: what is the matter Orimura Ichika? Do you not have any questions for me? Ichika: is that a sheet you're wearing? PROPHET: yes, it is. I was under the impression that the nature of your questions were for your ability to transform, not my state of attire. Ichika: but but, that's just a sheet! I mean it's clinging to your curves. As a healthy young man I find this highly distracting. PROPHET: Are you curious as to what lies underneath? Ichika:? PROPHET: If you must know then I must tell you that I am not wearing anything underneath. Ichika: *slack jawed* PROPHET: this, however is not my true form. My true form is somewhat... Unsightly. We are now in a neural interface meeting in a medium which you would call a "dream". What you currently see is merely the projection of what I know about my host body and a basic covering of her modesty. I have no knowledge in the practical design of such things as "clothes" or "under wear" so I cannot even construct an image of them. Ichika: so other than that sheet, you're naked? PROPHET: that is as humans would say, "the gist of it." Ichika: now I REALLY find this distracting. |
2013-12-29, 13:49 | Link #49653 | |
Awe of She
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Join Date: Dec 2005
Location: Orlando
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@ Fireminer -This isn't a shot at you Miner so don't take it as such - just wanted to rant a bit, especially since teaching Sex Ed to Ichika is something that she'd run away from - literally. And just a lil tip: Since it's just a draft, I can let it go as a placeholder of sorts, but I *hate* seeing 'roar' used for it's own sake. The sound that comes out when someone/something roars isn't "ROAR!" Using it like that is pretty much a literary cop-out. The roar of cannons firing sounds very different from the roar of a lion/tiger. And even then, a lion's roar is different from a tiger's. Or a human's 'roar'. The roar of the ocean - the general reading population will accept that but really it's the roar of the waves crashing against the beach is what makes that sound - not the entire ocean. Granted, it's hard to put the exact sound of a roar on paper since language is limited like that. You really can't translate exactly how something sounds to written medium, even if you use special characters. And also because different people will hear different things as well. Sometimes - SOMETIMES - you can use it like that but it works better if you 'make adjustments'. Like for a camera shutter, saying 'click' is boring and unimaginative and lends the reader to dismiss it as just some generic camera. 'Cli~ck' is a little more 'fun' to use since one can 'imagine' the sound in their head a bit better. 'k~Krk' - if read how it looks, comes across as being more phonetically correct in terms of how a camera shutter can sound, but it just looks weird... It's up to the discretion of the writer to use whichever variant he/she is comfortable with and what works for the narrative.
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2013-12-29, 17:53 | Link #49655 |
Lumine Passio
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Join Date: Jul 2013
Location: Hanoi, Vietnam
Age: 18
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@Akisa: You should have met blitz1/2. Even I, a hardcore Madoka fan still have to bow before enthusiatic of Twincest (Wincest in general).
@Tempest: Thanks for the input! I realized that using sounds words like that is one of my distingtive trace - Even more theatric element. Anyway, will mind your input! And I wonder how would Chifuyu "massage" Ichika? |
2013-12-29, 20:05 | Link #49658 |
Lumine Passio
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Join Date: Jul 2013
Location: Hanoi, Vietnam
Age: 18
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Then how about we double the thing up with both Madoka and Chifuyu?
By the way, know that this is not the place to ask this, but could a Sabbat (Fangire) be destroyed with just a katana, albeit a magical one? |
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