Create Your Own Justsu or Naruto character

[mrsticky005]

this isn't so much a jutsu as a technique but I think it might work pretty well.
Have Naruto surround someone with shadow clones and the real Naruto come in with rasengan and then before actually striking someone use subsitution jutsu to change places with a another shadow clone and then hit the opponent with rasengan.

[Deneiro]

hi im kinda new with this but i do have my own shinobi!

he has no group coz he left his village wenn he was nine but well here he is and if you have any comments about things that can be changed plz tell me



Shiroyo Daien( as shinobi also called Shirooni Daien)(shirooni means white devil) (shiroya means white night)

his father was a konohagakure shinobi & his mother was a kirigakure shinobi.

Daien barely knew his parents. They died when he was almost 5 years old. He still has his parents headbands and the anbu blade and mask wich belonged to his father. He grew up alone and had no friends in kirigakure.the only one who cared for him was his sensei .he mostly skipped school and learned the family style from the scrolls his parents left him. His father was a water-user and his mother was a wind-user so he was determined to learn both of those styles. he ran away from the village when he was 9 years old and a half year later he met the traveling jiraya who took him with him and taught him how to use his nature manipulation wich turned out to be water.
Now he is 15 (almost 16) and he has mastered water and wind. He is trying to learn raiton now but the first thing he wants to do is becoming an acknowledged konoha-shinobi.

Gekkei genkai : hyouringan (hyourin means the moon)
Element: suiton
Type of gekkei genkai: eye
Range: close to far range
Discription: by using the water in the air and on the ground he can sence his oponents and predict their movements and location and at his level he is even able to see his the jutsus his oponents are using before they even do it(depending on their speed coz be honest it is quit impossible nomatter how good you are if you fight someone with a speed like itachi or kakashi). Combining his shinobi skills with this gekkei genkai makes him kinda invincible to any water-user. and even against other shinobi a dangerous enemy. This skill also helps in making his jutsus more focused meaning stronger, faster and even more precise
(if you dont quit get how he is doing this then maybe you understand it better if i say there is water in the air and he can see the movement of someone by sencing how he is pushinagainst the water. So if it does not go to fast he can even sence what kind of technique his oponent is using.)

Gekkei genkai : fukai hyourin- mangetsu hyouringan
Element: suiton
Type of gekkei genkai: eye
Range: close to far range
Discription: this is the full limit of the hyouringan. It allows the user to comletey manipulate the water around him, making him cpable of intrupting his enemies movement or use of jutsus however its weakness is that it consumes a whole lot of chakra. The mangetsu hyouringan also enchances the strength of all his waterbased techniques and giveshim a more precise usage of his chakra wich means his jutsus take less chakra to perform.( when he uses this technique his handsign speed increces alot. And for water-style jutsus he doesnt even need to do any handsigns anymore.) but still this technique is quit exhausting and makes sure that after he has used it he is to weak to fight for 5-10 days depending on how long he used the skill.

Jutsu Name: getsei ryuudou / hyourin ryuudou
Element: suiton
Type of Jutsu: ninjutsu( swordstyle)
Jutsu Rank: B
Range: Medium
Discription: you use your chakra and bind it with water and then you use your blade to pointthe water and use your chakra to let the water spin and if it hits something or someone it goes right trough it becouse of the tremendous speed at wich the water gets spinned. (this technique can only be used in combination with the family sword-style hyourin mizukai)

Jutsu Name: hyourin mizukai
Element: none
Type of Jutsu: taijutsu( swordstyle)
Jutsu Rank: -
Range: close
Discription: this is the family sword-style of the shiroyo clan

Jutsu Name: fuuton – kazekai kanryuu
Element: raiton/fuuton
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Jutsu Rank: B
Range: Medium
Discription: you use fuuton and raiton: you create an enormous windpressure use your chakra to let your lightning flow in it while creating it and then you pressure it into a direction and next to the pressure being more powerfull due to the lightning on the impact it releases a tremandous lightning caused by an intense friction.( atleast if the lightning has a good focus and if it is being controlled well)

Jutsu Name: Suiton – juude dehoudai
Element: raiton/suiton
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Jutsu Rank: A
Range: Medium
Discription: you use suiton and raiton: you create a flow and use your chakra to let your lightning flow in it while creating it to speed it up and then you let it flow around you like a barrier and next to a stunning speed it slices a tremandous lightning on impact ( atleast if the lightning and water have a good focus and if it is being controlled well)

Jutsu Name: Suiton – kazekiri mizu no hangetsu
Element: fuuton/suiton
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Jutsu Rank: A
Range: Medium
Discription: you use suiton and fuuton: you create a flow just like a river and use your chakra to let your wind flow in it while creating it to speed it up and then you let the wind around it to sharpen it even more and next to a stunning speed it slices with a tremandous pressure on impact ( atleast if the wind and water have a good focus and if it is being controlled well)

this were his own techniques and of course he knows some standard skills like waterdragon or waterclone, waterprison etc.

and im still working on his final skill (ya know like kakashis sucking hole or narutos oodama rasengan)


well this was it plz comment

[yondaime95]

thanks sharfan. actually i did get one idea, but it's not completed yet. but yeah, thanks for the advice.

[Sharfan]

Actually, deneiro, I have only one thing to ask. At the beginning you said that he was a water and wind user, but then you started adding a lightning based jutsu. I am just wondering if he is able to use three chakra types, or if water and wind are his natural chakra (somehow, I really don't know how, but it may be possible ) and the lightning is his learned nature style? This site is all about fine-tuning your character through constructive criticism, which I have just recently started trying to provide, and it doesn't that your character is awful. It actually means that it is pretty good, and I hope you keep trying new ideas and don't just leave. It happens way too much (including myself, sorry) so I am really excited to see more of your ideas, and I think that the idea of the hyouringan. One time I came really close to making something like that, but I wasn't perserverent enough to pursue it. After reading your character, I feel like I should have. To end this statement I have one thing to say. Your character was Pretty Freakin AWESOME! if I do say so myself.

[Zaku Hyuga]

Hey guys what's going on? I haven't been posting, but I have been reading your characters and new villages. You're doing pretty good. One piece of of advice I can give you is write your characters and other stuff like you would a paper in school. You write it once there's your rough draft and you rewrite it making changes. And you keep doing so until your happy with it. Now you don't have to post every "draft" just the final one your happy with. Also you don't have to do that at all, it just might help a little.
Also you guys remember when I came up for the idea for the character creation contest? Well the first one starts tomorrow. Just go to the Fan Creation Section tomorrow and you'll find the entry thread there. Make sure you read the rules before posting. you'll have two weeks to work on your characters and tweak them as you like. And don't forget there is going to be a theme each month, so don't think you can make up anything you like. Seeing as I'm going to have to pick the first theme I won't enter this month, would be pretty unfair. And if they shut us down there I will continue the contest in the other forum I go to(the one in my sig and avvy). well I've gone on long enough, check in tomorrow for the theme and rules. Once I have the thread up I'll put a link to it in this post.

EDIT I have the page up here's the link http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?t=66039

[Sharfan]

Originally Posted by Spectacular_Insanity

2. The Sankage. You're stepping on the toes of canon a little too much for my taste. I don't want to restrict your creativity, but there are really only FIVE Kages in the Narutoverse. Those are the Hokage, Kazekage, Mizukage, Tsuchikage, and Raikage. There are no others. The so-called "Hoshikage" from the Naruto filler episodes doesn't count. He was lame anyway.

I am sorry about that, I was being a little unclear, I realize that after reading it. I had only meant that as a holding place for the leader of the village. The village wanted to be as great as Konoha, but it new that it couldn't have an "official" Kage. So they made a "fake" Kage position to hold the place of their leader. They also new that no one would try to stop them from it because of their knowledge of the mountains, and the fact that their shinobi system grants them great military and strategic ability. Plus, not many ninja know of this village.

I hope that helps. I meant to put it in there somewhere, but was not thinking completely straight when I posted.

[Keikan]

Originally Posted by Spectacular_Insanity

@Sharfan: Very interesting village. The idea is cool. However, there were two things I had issues with:

1. Format. Nitpicky, yes, but that's how I am. Fix the funny spacing. It makes it hard to read. When cutting and pasting from somewhere else, especially in HTML format, it's best to get rid of hard returns so it doesn't look so weird when pasted unto a normal forum.

2. The Sankage. You're stepping on the toes of canon a little too much for my taste. I don't want to restrict your creativity, but there are really only FIVE Kages in the Narutoverse. Those are the Hokage, Kazekage, Mizukage, Tsuchikage, and Raikage. There are no others. The so-called "Hoshikage" from the Naruto filler episodes doesn't count. He was lame anyway.

Other than that, it was cool and I'll be looking forward to more of your stuff.

You know, if Sharfan stepped on canon's toes with one kage, then I must have crushed canon's toes with spiky boots, having two kages and all.

[Spectacular_Insanity]

Originally Posted by Keikan

You know, if Sharfan stepped on canon's toes with one kage, then I must have crushed canon's toes with spiky boots, having two kages and all.

Well, at least that's not nearly as bad as idiots who try to make their characters a part of the Sannin (which, I might remind you all means literally "Three People", and refers ONLY to Jiraiya, Tsunade and Orochimaru) or somesuch crap. I think I saw a few posts like that in this thread before. Those, as I remember, were pretty pathetic.

[Sakuranbo]

Originally Posted by Spectacular_Insanity

Well, at least that's not nearly as bad as idiots who try to make their characters a part of the Sannin (which, I might remind you all means literally "Three People", and refers ONLY to Jiraiya, Tsunade and Orochimaru) or somesuch crap. I think I saw a few posts like that in this thread before. Those, as I remember, were pretty pathetic.

And here I thought I held the title for bluntest user, tch way to usurp the championship belt from me Spec

[Deneiro]

hey im back and i kinda made some mprovements on his past!
i also seperated the raiton jutsus from the other ones coz i might have told it bad last time. he has mastered water and wind but discovered his potential for ligtning

Spoiler for uhm this is an image of daien i made with paint!:

dont mind the ugly quality that is only because i enlarged it.

Spoiler for shiroyo Daiens past!:

Shiroyo Daien( as shinobi also called Shirooni Daien)
(shirooni means white devil)(shiroyo means white night)
his father was a konohagakure shinobi & his mother was a kirigakure shinobi.

Daien was a the son of two shinobi living in kirigakure. His father Shiroyo Getsei and his mother
Shiroyo Daia died when Daien was 5 years old. The kirigakure shinobi said it was an accident, but Daien wouldn't believe that. His father and mother were to great shinobi to simply die in an accident he said.
Filled with anger and sadness he was determined to learn suiton wich his father had mastered, and fuuton wich his mother had mastered. He had no friends in the village and hardly ever went to school. He was so determined that he trained and learned from his fathers shiroyo scrolls to master their family skill: the hyouringan. He learned how to use water-jutsus from his fathers scrolls and he learned how to use
wind-jutsus from his mothers scrolls.he also found some lightning scrolls wich belonged to his grandfather from his mothers side. When he was 9 years old he finally learned to use the hyouringan. He then decided that it was time to leave his village. He took some of hs scrolls. Also theone wich intriqued him te most: a scroll about the dangerous full limit of the hyouringan. After he had traveled for 3 months he met a wandering man who he tought was kind of pererted(jirajya DUH). After seeing the man take out some thief-shinobi he decided he wants the man to teach him. The wanderer decided to take Daien as his student and tought him some skills andlearned him how to perfect his water-jutsus and wind-jutsus. When he was 13 years he decidedto travel one alone and strengthen his skills all on his one. A couple yaers after that he discovered he had some potential for lightning. Then he tought of his grandfathers scrolls.

Now he is 15 (almost 16) and he has mastered water and wind. He hasn't mastered raiton yet so using the raitonskills he tought of is still more dangerous to himself than to his enemy. But now the first thing he wants to do is becoming an acknowledged konoha-shinobi.

Spoiler for about his gekkei genkai!:

Gekkei genkai : hyouringan
Element: suiton
Type of gekkei genkai: eye
Range: close to far range
Discription: by using the water in the air and on the ground he can sence his oponents and predict their movements and location and at his level he is even able to see his the jutsus his oponents are using before they even do it(depending on their speed coz be honest it is quit impossible nomatter how good you are if you fight someone with a speed like itachi or kakashi). Combining his shinobi skills with this gekkei genkai makes him kinda invincible to any water-user. and even against other shinobi a dangerous enemy. This skill also helps in making his jutsus more focused meaning stronger, faster and even more precise
(if you dont quit get how he is doing this then maybe you understand it better if i say there is water in the air and he can see the movement of someone by sencing how he is pushinagainst the water. So if it does not go to fast he can even sence what kind of technique his oponent is using.)

Gekkei genkai : fukai hyourin- mangetsu hyouringan
Element: suiton
Type of gekkei genkai: eye
Range: close to far range
Discription: this is the full limit of the hyouringan. It allows the user to comletey manipulate the water around him, making him cpable of intrupting his enemies movement or use of jutsus however its weakness is that it consumes a whole lot of chakra. The mangetsu hyouringan also enchances the strength of all his waterbased techniques and giveshim a more precise usage of his chakra wich means his jutsus take less chakra to perform.( when he uses this technique his handsign speed increces alot. And for water-style jutsus he doesnt even need to do any handsigns anymore.) but still this technique is quit exhausting and makes sure that after he has used it he is to weak to fight for 5-10 days depending on how long he used the skill.

Jutsu Name: getsei ryuudou / hyourin ryuudou
Element: suiton
Type of Jutsu: ninjutsu( swordstyle)
Jutsu Rank: B
Range: Medium
Discription: you use your chakra and bind it with water and then you use your blade to pointthe water and use your chakra to let the water spin and if it hits something or someone it goes right trough it becouse of the tremendous speed at wich the water gets spinned. (this technique can only be used in combination with the family sword-style hyourin mizukai)

Spoiler for his family swordstyle with a special jutsu:

Jutsu Name: hyourin mizukai
Element: none
Type of Jutsu: taijutsu( swordstyle)
Jutsu Rank: -
Range: close
Discription: this is the family sword-style of the shiroyo clan


Jutsu Name: Suiton – kazekiri mizu no hangetsu
Element: fuuton/suiton
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Jutsu Rank: A
Range: Medium
Discription: you use suiton and fuuton: you create a flow just like a river and use your chakra to let your wind flow in it while creating it to speed it up and then you let the wind around it to sharpen it even more and next to a stunning speed it slices with a tremandous pressure on impact ( atleast if the wind and water have a good focus and if it is being controlled well)

Spoiler for jutsus with raiton wich he can still not quit use:

Jutsu Name: fuuton – kazekai kanryuu
Element: raiton/fuuton
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Jutsu Rank: B
Range: Medium
Discription: you use fuuton and raiton: you create an enormous windpressure use your chakra to let your lightning flow in it while creating it and then you pressure it into a direction and next to the pressure being more powerfull due to the lightning on the impact it releases a tremandous lightning caused by an intense friction.( atleast if the lightning has a good focus and if it is being controlled well)

Jutsu Name: Suiton – juude dehoudai
Element: raiton/suiton
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Jutsu Rank: A
Range: Medium
Discription: you use suiton and raiton: you create a flow and use your chakra to let your lightning flow in it while creating it to speed it up and then you let it flow around you like a barrier and next to a stunning speed it slices a tremandous lightning on impact ( atleast if the lightning and water have a good focus and if it is being controlled well)

i still am designing some jutsus but atleast his past is kinda clear now.

[Spectacular_Insanity]

@Deneiro: I like your stuff (especially the pixel art---very well done), but I have a problem with your kekkei genkai, hyouringan. Not it's concept, which I think is cool, but the fact that you said it makes the user INVINCIBLE. Just for a reality check, no one is invincible. Sorry to burst you bubble, but that's just how it is. Overall character design is good, but that one kekkei genkai is WAY to overpowered. Overpowered characters and/or jutsus naturally get a 0/10 for me. However, barring that, I'd give the rest a 7/10 (-1 point for bad spelling and grammar). Run on sentences that go on for a paragraph make it very hard to read and understand either concepts behind jutsus, or character background. A tip for the future: Proofread your posts at least once to fix simple stuff like that. It's a bit frustrating to the readers when they have to interpret what you're trying to say because of stuff like bad spelling/grammar.

[Sharfan]

@Deneiro: I agree with specatacular insanity, your kekkei genkai and grammatical errors do make it a bit difficult to "beleive". I think if all you did was make the kekkei genkai a little bit less powerful, and proofread your post, then I would have probably given it a almost perfect rating. If you remember these things when you are working on your next character then I am sure it will be a very great character.

[narufan11]

hey everyone sorry i have not been posting i've been busy it happens to all of us right? i am working on a character right now from the village i posted a few pages back.

and to save this post from being completely off subject Deneiro: nice post especially for someone who is new at this not saying im some expert but i did enjoy it.

[Deneiro]

hey guys uhm i read your comments but i think i said hes kind of invincible!

well compare it to the byakugan
byakugan seems invincible right!!!
but it doesnt anymore if you know about the blind spot in the back of his neck doesnt it!

its te same with the hyouringan. so let me tell you its ((super obvious and if u think logical very easy to think of))WEAKNESS. the hyouringan can sense how you press against the water. the more water there is in the air or on the ground the easier the hyouringan can read your movements! so obviously its effectivity goes down if you minimize the water, by 1: avoiding battles on a river or lake! and 2: minimize the water in the air by using heat/fire jutsus. the same goes for the full limit of the hyouringan. the full limit can control the water in his area to block the enemies movements or for offensive use by pushing the water around. but if you use fire skills u block it mostly coz then there almost is no water to use to push around!


kinda sounds logical doesnt it?(it doesnt seem so overpowered anymore to now you know its weakness doesnt it?)
im looking forward to your comments

[Deneiro]

oh and sharfan about what you said with making a next character!

i dont think im coming up with one the coming time because i want to perfect Shiroya Daien first. I always think its better to finish one thing before you start with another

[Sharfan]

Hey I've been working on a new character-

Spoiler for Meruto Iki:

Name: Meruto Iki

Gender: Male

Birthday: April 28

Age: 16

Height: 6' 2"

Weight: 162 lbs.

Hair: Black

Eyes: >Normal- Blue
>After Funkazu- Completely Red. One of his eyes had to be removed because of injury from chakra-concentrated magma.

Clothing: He wears a black cloak with a metal chest plate. His headband covers his eyeless socket.

Personality: Self-confident and joking, although when things get serious his behavior changes to serious and level-headed. He does not take anything from anyone, and usually will fight to defend his dignity. He is even more perverted than Jaraiya!

Academy Graduation: 11

Ninja Rank: Chunin

Elements: Fire and Earth

Jutsu Affinity: Ninjutsu- 35%
Ginjutsu- 5%
Taijutsu- 60%

Village: Hitokazan (Hidden volcano village)

Bloodline Limit: Kyouretsu- This is a very rare bloodline limit that ocurs once every 7 generations. This, when coupled with the Ninzangan Blade, intensifies the users fire chakra, not only increasing the strength of his fire jutsus, but also allowing him to combine the intensified chakra with his earth chakra to create youton (magma) chakra. Its main weakness is that, if he stops concentrating it will start to eat away at his eye and body because of its intensity.

Weapons/items: Ninzangan Blade (Burning Lava Blade)- This is the Meruto family blade. It is a special blade that, when in the hands of a Meruto, is constantly at the temperature in which rocks melt. This blade is not only useful for taijutsu, but it gives Iki the ability to combine his earth and fire chakra to create magma (youton) chakra.

Specialties/Skills: With the help of the Ninzangan Blade he can perform youton style jutsu, and create weapons out of melted rock. He can also manipulate the ground around him into any shape he wants.

Jutsu: >Kasaitokkan no Jutsu- Jutsu in which Iki concentrates his youton chakra into the ground to make a river of lava. If Iki is not careful he can be killed by the use of this jutsu.(Uses chakra depending on how large the flow is)

>Magma Clone Jutsu- Iki creates a clone out of melted rock that, when hit, will burn the opponent. Takes great concentration. (Uses 8% chakra to create, then a constant flow to maintain)

>Fire Style: Fireball Jutsu (Uses 12% chakra)

>Fire Style: Pheonix Flower Jutsu (Uses 5% chakra per fireball)

>Fire Style: Dragon Flame Jutsu (Uses 18% chakra)

>Fire Style: Firengan Jutsu- Iki forms a fireball of greatly concentrated chakra in his hand, and then launches it at the opponent. Like pheonix flower jutsu, the user can control it after he throws it. (Uses 22% chakra)

>Earth Style: Rock Slide Jutsu (Uses 14% chakra)

>Earth Style: Giant Boulder Jutsu (Uses 20% chakra, and requires great strength)

>Earth Style: Mud Wall Jutsu (Uses 10% chakra to create, then the chakra to maintain depends on the strength of the opponent's attacks)

Taijutsu Style: >Ninzangan sword style- Taijutsu which Iki does many different techniques with the Ninzangan Blade.

>Ryuuguma (flowing magma) style- Style in which Iki uses his kekkei genkai to dodge most of his opponents attacks and use strong blows to fight, which is not always effective. Takes more chakra than normal taijutsu.

>Mouryougan (raging lava) style- Style in which Iki uses his kekkei genkai to both attack and dodge in a linked movement. Is mostly effective, unless the opponent is either too fast, or there is some other variable that makes it difficult to read his movements. Uses up twice as much energy as Flowing Lava style.

Fighting Style: Brutal most of the time, unless he is in a situation which requires a more strategic approach. In that case he can switch to a more subtle fighting style.

Story: Iki grew up in a volcano, on an island, near the land of tea. At a young age, he was taught some of the most devastating fire style jutsus. When he was 10 his family realized that he also had an affinity for earth jutsu, which made him the only one in the family that had the ability to do both fire and earth jutsu. When he graduated from the ninja academy, his parents told him that if he wanted to achieve his full potential, he would have to travel and look for a teacher in the hidden stone village, because of the difficulty of earth style jutsu for a fire user. So, after a week of preperation, Iki went off in search of a master. After a year of searching, he found someone named Hirogi Katsomaru, to teach him. After another year and a half of training he learned the basic earth jutsus, but was then told that he would have to learn the rest on his own. Realizing that he could do nothing more there, he thanked his teacher and left for home. Along the way, he trained harder then he had ever trained before and was rewarded by having his own, special, jutsu.When he returned to his home at the age of 14 (almost 15), he found his family dead, murdered by a rival village. Inside his room he found a note that explained that he was the one and only heir to an ancient family heirloom, the Ninzangan Blade. Iki was the only one through 7 generations that had both fire and earth chakra. Which, when this happens in the Meruto family and the family member wields the Ninzangan sword, it awakens the kekkei genkai of the member. It also said that Iki needed to be careful, because only a few were able to survive the power from the kekkei genkai. After learning this, he went to where the note said the sword was and removed it from its protective casing and was immediately overwhelmed with unusual strength. So much so that he didn't even notice that he was losing sight in his left eye. By the time he did notice he had gone completely blind in that eye. The med-ninja even had to remove his eye because of the risk of it spreading to the rest of his body. When he woke up the next morning he was told that the sword increased his fire chakra's intensity so much that it was starting to eat away at his body. After Iki had time to think about it he realized that if he ever wanted to use the sword he would have to become tougher so that he could handle the power and control it. After 9 months of training he tried to wield the sword again and succeeded. Once he started training with the sword he realized that the Ninzangan sword didn't just intensify your fire chakra, it also made it possible to combine it with earth chakra to create his magma (youton) chakra. We know find him at age 16 with a deep understanding of his family's taijutsu style that he learned from scrolls.

I made a picture to, but I can't get it to work. If anyone knows how to get it here can they please tell me.

[Deneiro]

hey sharfan i know a way to put an image here!


if you want to put an image here you need to insert an URL.
so you first upload your image on a site like imeem.com

And once u uploaded it you click on that image in your gallery, copy the URL and then you paste the URL at 'insert Image' . and your done

i hope i helped you

[yondaime95]

well, i have finally found my binder, so i'm gonna post a couple characters.

Spoiler for to save space:

Name:???
Nickname:Leader
Age:26
Rank:Missing-nin/former jounin
Gender:Female
Hair Colour:Black
Jutsu Focus:Ninjutsu
Elemental Affinity: Darkness, Fire
Weapon:Katana
Village:Hidden in the Shadows
Appearance:This girl wears a red and black mask, as well as the yoruyonaka cloak, which is black, and has a silver dragon wrapping around it. She also has a ponytail in her hair, with a katana on her back.
Background:Not much is known about this girl, except that she is the leader of an infamous group known as the yoruyonaka, and that she is not a force to be reckoned with. Nobody who has fought her has lived to tell the tale, except for one person. The identity and the whereabouts of this guy are uknown, but they know that they both want revenge.
Sensei:N/A
Teamates/partner:Genkotsu
Relatives:???
Favorite Jutsus:Zodiac barrage
Summoning Jutsu:Astral Warrior
12 Strikes of the Zodiac

Spoiler for to save space:

Name:Genkotsu
Nickname:N/A
Age:19
Rank:Missing-nin/former ANBU
Gender:Male
Hair Colour:White
Jutsu Focus:Taijutsu
Elemental Affinity:Wind
Weapons:Giant Sword, Ninja Tools
Village:Hidden in the Storms
Appearance:Genkotsu wears the normal yoruyonaka outfit(cloak and half mask), but intead of having th cloak done up, he has undone. He wears his headband around his neck,with black pants and a blue shirt.When his taijutsu skills are not enough to get the job done, he uses the giant sword on his back to finish off his opponents.
Backgorund:Genkotsu comes from the hidden storm village, and is an expert sword and taijutsu user. He has also studied forbidden jutsus, and has a double pronged "end-all" move in his arsenal, nobody has ever seen or heard of before.
Sensei:N/A
Teammates/Partner:Leader
Relatives:N/A
Favorite Jutsus:Extreme Lotus
Wind Levitation Jutsu
Final Lotus

Well, those are my new guys, i hope you liked them.

[sarikat]

Here's my girl!

Name: Sari
Age: 14
B-day: N/A
family power thing, (i 4got the name! whoops.): Rose jutsues, shadow jutsues
rank: whatever is stronger than sannine
gender: female
hair color & length: brown, down 2 middle of back
jutsue focus: err, ninjutsue, yeah...
elements: water, fire, wind
weapons: basic ninja gear, shadow kuniae
village: leaf
appearence: well, i got the hair part, errr, i know! aqua colored mini skirt w/ short leggings under it, tank top belly shirt w/ fishnet quarter length coverin her arms, black wrist length gloves, headband around her 4head.
backround: she's a mysterious person.
sensaie: she's a loner, hates most people, and can't decide if she's good or bad.
teamate/partner: her pet panther
family: orochimaru killed them all.
favorite jutsues: shadow rose, shadow kunai attack, death rose, pantheris spirit.
just some xtra info: HATES DOGS, kiba and his mutt better watch it.

well thats Sari. cool right?

[Keikan]

Originally Posted by sarikat

Here's my girl!

Name: Sari
Age: 14
B-day: N/A
family power thing, (i 4got the name! whoops.): Rose jutsues, shadow jutsues
rank: whatever is stronger than sannine
gender: female
hair color & length: brown, down 2 middle of back
jutsue focus: err, ninjutsue, yeah...
elements: water, fire, wind
weapons: basic ninja gear, shadow kuniae
village: leaf
appearence: well, i got the hair part, errr, i know! aqua colored mini skirt w/ short leggings under it, tank top belly shirt w/ fishnet quarter length coverin her arms, black wrist length gloves, headband around her 4head.
backround: she's a mysterious person.
sensaie: she's a loner, hates most people, and can't decide if she's good or bad.
teamate/partner: her pet panther
family: orochimaru killed them all.
favorite jutsues: shadow rose, shadow kunai attack, death rose, pantheris spirit.
just some xtra info: HATES DOGS, kiba and his mutt better watch it.

well thats Sari. cool right?

Half cool. No birthday??? Stronger than sannin at 14??? Correct me if I'm wrong anyone, but there is no actual rank higher that S-Class/Kage/Sannin is there?

Ok full critisism, the setup needs work. Punctuation needs work ... capitals please. Please no sms text (4head, 4got, xtra, 2 instead of to). For background, 'she's a mysterious person' is probably not the best to keep people interested, maybe something a bit more detailed without giving stuff away. Typing what you have there just makes you look lazy. Also you say 'favourite jutsu' and list names, names only hint at the effect of a jutsu, it would be a good idea to add effects.

I would say this character needs some serious work.

On a completely unserious note: what's the matter with dogs??? Dogs are the coolest and Akamaru is not a 'mutt' but a nin-dog which is much cooler.