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Tenshi's Defense Squadron
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2011-11-21, 00:41 | Link #8666 |
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Yeah, and just to give you heads-up; Ch. 4 of Project Silverback maybe a little complex/confusing... But if you have any thoughts, feedbacks, ect, can you write them in a review on Fanfic.net so I can use it as a reference?
I don't want it to get lost on here. |
2011-11-21, 00:49 | Link #8669 |
Head of FRACTURE R&D
Join Date: Oct 2011
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@ Eratas: Laura will have much more maturity and responsibility by far. But Kyuukai will surpass her in both during times of serious need or during times with heavy emotional weight.
So, people will say Laura wears the pants in the relationship, but Kyuukai is the one who takes them off of her at times. And the romantics will say he's the only one who does/can do it slowly with relish and perverted desire. |
2011-11-21, 00:59 | Link #8670 |
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@ Rain - Can you read the draft of the epilogue I made for Irish? It's on page 426. I need to know what you think since I'm showing a morally gray side of FRACTURE.
Side note - Ichika and Irish never wear the pants Must suck to be them
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2011-11-21, 01:06 | Link #8671 |
Head of FRACTURE R&D
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@ Eratas: I saw it, I also took note of the Modern Warfare reference.
Anyway, it's good. FRACTURE is indeed a morally gray organization. What they aim for is morally right, but the methods of getting there are spotty at best. Autumn's summary of FRACTURE: "You ever wonder why the flag is black? People say it's a neutral color, some people say it secretly represents evil, but I have my own opinions. FRACTURE's history is stained with blood. From the First Conflict to the Second Conflict to even today. FRACTURE is a military, no matter what kind of diplomacy they may enforce. And with every military, blood and death tend to follow. So I believe FRACTURE's flag is red. Darkened blood red. Stained so many times it's gone black from the crusted liquid of life... Our hands are stained with the very same thing boy. So don't preach to me. I won't preach to you. Because you and I know... We don't have the right." |
2011-11-21, 01:19 | Link #8672 |
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@ Rain - Mactavish is an ass Good thing Tatenashi was there or he would've Brutalized Irish right then and there
The way things are going, it's going to be a while till Kyuukai and Irish get along. They're frenemies in the drafts though. I also planned a similar scene with Kyuukai and Irish. Any tips?
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2011-11-21, 01:28 | Link #8673 |
I am no one
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Location: Inside your head
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Unable to win verbal match for Modem privileges, and somehow has to resort to internet cafe anyway.
What I mean is exactly that, Mondo grosso Jr. as V3 replacement. But then again I might just replace V6 or 7 instead so Tatenahsi and Kanzashi can be introduced.... I just think that Beach episode are waste of time, that's all...
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2011-11-21, 01:29 | Link #8675 |
Head of FRACTURE R&D
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@ Eratas: Forced to migrate to phone. Responses will take a small while to punch out.
Anyway, just have Kyuukai call Irish out on what he does and vice versa. More ideas may come to me later. Also, I'd suggest a scene where Irish and Koyomi meet, but they don't know who the other is or what Irish has done and who Koyomi's related to. |
2011-11-21, 01:33 | Link #8678 |
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@ Rain - I meant an Interrogation scene. Kyuukai is good but everyone gets their buttons pushed at some point. Irish mocking him is gonna push him over the edge and do a lot of the things Mactavish tried to do earlier.
The scene where he meets Koyomi can be here since she'll see her brother fighting/beating up someone who can't fight back. Probably not the best thing for a child to see.
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2011-11-21, 01:47 | Link #8680 |
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@ Rain - He doesn't hate kids. He thinks they still have some way to prevent things from turning into an IS ruled world.
Though, since she's Tabane's kid, he'll ignore her moat of the time. Side note - Is Koyomi finding Kyuukai assaulting Irish alright with you? @ Jak - Using a phone, can't see the video
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