2009-10-07, 11:51 | Link #1101 | |
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Deserving in love, is like, one of the most shallow things. Like, "I did thing A and B, you just did thing a, ZOMG YOU DO NOT DESERVE HIM!" Yeah ok, sure.
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2009-10-07, 17:03 | Link #1102 | |
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Say there's a supplier and he has cupcake. Now there are three people he could possibly give this cupcake to. One is an investor who has regualarly contributed large sums of money to his estate and through those contributions he has managed to uphold his estate. The man and the investor have a very formal and impersonal relationship. The investor is not really hungry at all. The second is a service provider who has helped maintain the man's estate for many years. The two have a very friendly and personal relationship and the service provider is very loyal to him. The service provider is only moderately hungry. The third is a very unfortunate man who, from sort of circumstances, has gone without food for days. The unfortunate man has done no work and contributed nothing to the man, nor does the man know him. Needless to say, the unfortunate man is very hungry. So who deserves the cupcake most? Again, I don't think there really is a definite correct answer, it all depends on your beliefs and personal preference. And this is just a simplified problem. There are so many variables that could take place in a real-life situation, and again, it all depends on personal preference. Please keep in mind this example isn't meant to exactly replicate the situation with Lelouch, C.C., Kallen and Shirley (though there are some canny, but not absolute resemblances) Anyway, for the protection theme...well, I know C.C. wasn't exactly the most noble character, but I don't think she was horribly malicious either. I don't think she had Lelouch's best interests in mind more than Shirley though. So on that I'll pretty much agree with you blade. As far as Shirley goes, I don't know if she deserved Lelouch more than C.C., Kallen, or anyone else, but I think she deserved more than what she got. I mean, C.C. and Kallen were given new reasons and desires to live thanks to Lelouch, and what did Shirley get? "Yeah, hope you enjoyed this life of yours that was cut so tragically short. Don't let the door hit you on the way out." |
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2009-10-07, 22:23 | Link #1104 |
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Hmm, you know it took me a minute to remember which fanfic you had written or if I had even read it, but then I realized it was the Shirley-cyborg one (gosh, it's been so long). Anywho, I thought it was pretty good. The prose was nicely written and constructed and all that. I have one or two minor complaints, mainly the part about Shirley calling her mother "Mama." It seems kind of...I don't know...southern valley-ish. I think "Mom" probably would've worked better. Also, the whole crowd ganging up on the molester with the ladies nodding their heads and men cracking their knuckles seemed kind of cartoon-ish. But otherwise great job.
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2009-10-07, 22:29 | Link #1105 |
Goat Herder
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... if cyborg!Shirley's hanging around Emperor Lelouch, then shouldn't she already know the well-being of Suzaku and Arthur? Its Nina and Kallen she wouldn't know about, unless this takes place after Lelouch and Suzaku pulled their stunt on democracy at the UFN meeting...
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2009-10-08, 01:32 | Link #1106 | ||
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2009-10-08, 02:33 | Link #1108 |
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Lelouch can be a bastard sometimes, so I wrote this as a secret he intends to keep, for now at least. Maybe, he will reveal it. Maybe, he will not. But, I'm sure he'll anticipate that come Zero Requiem, Shirley would want to find out who this replacement Zero is, and then realise that for the rest of their lives, Suzaku and her have to live in the shadows. At least, there is someone who can even begin to understand what he (Suzaku) would be going through.
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2009-10-08, 02:57 | Link #1110 | |
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2009-10-08, 03:04 | Link #1112 | |
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Another chapter. This one takes place after that visit to Tokyo. Spoiler for writing:
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2009-10-08, 03:09 | Link #1113 |
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Shirley. There were no good reasons she turned into a sacrificial lamb.
She was in the way of the other girl's 'future' with Lelouch so she was knocked off. She might have brough Lelouch more stability and acutally might have allowed Lelouch to become a bit more normal in his lifestyle. But Lelouch had to be filled with angst, he needed to be a basketcase or borderline psychotic, and he needed to be alone. So Shirley died. I preferred Lelouch ending up with C.C. was Shirley died for no good reason for a main character.
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2009-10-08, 03:25 | Link #1115 | ||
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Edit: Loli, feel free to slap me around if you feel that I'm putting words in your mouth. =P
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2009-10-08, 13:19 | Link #1118 |
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Ha ha, don't worry about it azul. I actually made the same mistake initially, but then I went back and re-read it.
@Whitewing: I'm inclined to agree with you about the fact that Shirley died for pretty much no good reason. However, I don't agree that she was killed off to make way for the other girls' "future" with Lelouch. I hardly think the writers would do something that shallow and calloused (...ah who am I kidding? This is Sunrise we're talking about ) And it's not like the other girls had a future with Lelouch anyway, so there would be no point. @yezhanquan: Another great chapter. Keep it coming |
2009-10-09, 01:20 | Link #1120 |
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Ha ha, I know what you mean. I wish I had a better schedule and more time to work on my fanfic. Anywho, speaking of which, and since we're sharing our fanfics anyway, I thought I'd post a preview of the next chapter of my Code Geass: A World Abandoned fanfic. Keep in mind though that this isn't a complete and final version. This is just a rought draft that has yet to be revised and it's not the full chapter, just a segment. Enjoy.
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