2008-07-09, 19:51 | Link #2281 |
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Well here's the latest contest thread fron Zaku, through me: http://forums.animesuki.com/showthread.php?t=68346.
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2008-07-09, 19:56 | Link #2282 | |
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Secondly, to correct a fact that you stated, "White Fang" is not Kakashi; it is his father. I would like to point out that I never stated that Sakeme could not defeat the "White Fang". What I said was was that the Mist used Sakeme to fight to even the playing field since the Leaf was using the "White Fang". To give a little bit more detail, the Mist used Sakeme to counteract the "White Fang" and his actions. For example, ninja who were attacked by the "White Fang" and were wounded but not dead would be healed by Sakeme and would go on to fight again. As far as her fighting style, she is a long range attacker. The point of medical ninjas is to avoid enemy attacks and to not get killed in order to heal your comrads (this has been stated by Tsunade and Sakura several times). Sakeme usually doesn't fight but sits on the side lines assisting her comrads by using her Wangetsugan on the enemy or by putting them in a genjutsu. If everything goes smoothly, 85% of the time the enemy can not attack her because they are either in a genjutsu, are dealing with her gekkai genkai, or she is using a defensive move. Finally, you have a point concerning her mask and her doujutsu. I could see her wearing her mask the same way Kakashi wore his when he was in ANBU (he wore his mask halfway over his face so that his Sharingan was not covered). She wears her mask halfway over her face since she only needs one of her Wangetsugans to use their abilities. Most of the time, in the beginning of a battle, Sakeme will have her face fully covered and will use genjutsu before resorting to her Wangetsugan. I hope I answered your questions. |
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2008-07-09, 22:20 | Link #2284 |
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??? still doesn't make sense. If some person is trying to kill another person, why would he treat that person good. So why would Kakashi's father treat your character well if she is trying to kill him. This is a shinobi world. Only character in this anime that is kind is Naruto. Fighting isn't a game for them, it's survival. Kakashi's father killed Sasori's parents. He doesn't discriminate whether the shinobi is a woman or a man. In those times too, are a time of hate. Each side hated each other. Sasori's grandmother even said so which is why she didn't hesitate when he thought Kakashi is the white fang.
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2008-07-09, 22:39 | Link #2286 |
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Doesn't make sense also. Why would they teach him jutsus? He's an enemy even after they altered his mind. There is still a big possibility that he will regain his memories and turn on them which did happen. Why would the Konoha shinobi's bind him or capture him? He showed no signs that he holds important information. When did you see ninjas from Konoha capture people for interrogation? They just kill them.
This is a shinobi world. They use children in chuunin exams for political reasons and it doesn't matter if they survive or not. When Neiji asked the referee to stop the match or else he may kill Naruto, the referee didn't even care. He was like "go ahead". |
2008-07-09, 22:57 | Link #2287 | |
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2008-07-09, 23:49 | Link #2288 |
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Ok Fuzzy, lay off! You shouldn't be giving anyone advice as you've completely shot down any and all given to you. If you can't take advice then don't give it! Now to answer your questions as you obviousy didn't read it that well, it was on crazy old man in the desert who had some whacked plan he was going to take over Leaf with some Anbu he accidentally caught. so he brain washes him and teaches him his jutsu. Now when Kisuke goes back to Leaf the three genin probably didn't know who he was so they went for help. When the other Anbu and Hokage showed up they probably expected to find some foreign ninja, but they recognize him despite new tatoos and low and behold it's one of their strongest anbu who they thought was dead. The Hokage apparently having knowledge of the markings and weapons kisuke was carrying knew who had done this to his anbu and knew there was no need in killing one of his own ninja, so revived his memory. I don't see how you can say it doesn't make sense other than you really didn't read it and pay attention to it. Yeah that's probably not something they would use in an anime or manga but it makes sense. Make sure you read things closely before you open your mouth and shoot it off. BTW not everyone can be a perfect story writer like you think you are to meet your standards of a good story.
Shinabaru: Good job on your second character. Interesting backround, although a bit far fetched good job. Forgot to mention although the story is a little far fetched it is extremely original. Something which Fuzzy As..Wuzzy has been ranting about for God knows how many posts and failed to mention in hers about your character. She's probably just mad and didn't metion it cause it's more original than hers.
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2008-07-10, 00:36 | Link #2289 | |
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Ok, good character, though as Zaku said maybe not for the anime or manga but honestly, who cares? Where in the rules for this thread does it state that the characters are meant for the anime or the manga? There is one little thing in the biography .. why would the Hokage come out of the village for one, at the time, unidentified shinobi? The Kages don't leave their villages for much. I don't think a Kage would leave their village, I just don't think it's believable, unless the genin that was sent back explained the shinobi's abilities and the Kage recognised them somehow. But then he or she would take more them two ANBU. And why were the Genin out alone?? Shouldn't they have a Jounin or at least a Chunin with them? Well I started off on one track and found another . But this is still a good character.
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You guys can even form a group with anti-fuzzy slogans but I will provide honest criticism. I will tell which ones are good and which ones interesting, what characters are lacking what. Every time I see leet ninja's with over the top resumes and one hit kill jutsus then expect me to say it like that. Quote:
If you want to have a love thing going on with Konoha's white fang, you could do a simple spin. I'll give you a possible story and you let your creativity flow and maybe write a new way for them to have a love thing going on. Spoiler for Story:
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2008-07-10, 01:51 | Link #2291 | |
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Alright, first off, TheBrotherGrimm, you've done an incredible job on a first character! Only rarely do we see work done so well from a new member. I can't wait to see what else you come up with!
Second, Shinabaru, a job well done as well. The bio's a bit farfetched, but it's still good. Keep up the good work as well. Alright, praise out of the way, Fuzzy Wuzzy, I've just about had it with you. Never in my time on this forum have I seen someone so arrogant, pompous, and condescending. I'll just go through all of this bit by bit. Quote:
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It sucks. Why? I don't know, I didn't bother to actually read it, but I feel qualified enough to say that your work probably sucks, and is more than likely some cheap ripoff of another story, and just plain lacking in any form of originality whatsoever. You might as well have just copied and pasted from another story and swapped out the characters, because you obviously don't have any originality. ... See? Doesn't make much sense, nor is it very fair, to do it your way, huh?
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2008-07-10, 05:29 | Link #2294 |
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theBrotherGrimm: I like the slogan. BTW I can't wait for Sakeme's jutsu. If they are like the rest of Sakeme they'll be worth seeing.
Adediran242: If you're still looking for Kekkei Genkai, I'm working on it. Hopefully I'll have one up for you in 24 hours or less . Dan the Man: Did you seriously not read it? I read it to see if your assumption were close and I would say they are basically bang on the mark. Do you have psychic powers or something?? You've been here since page 10 wow.
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2008-07-10, 10:33 | Link #2296 | |
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Dan_The_Man: I read some of your works. Although you put effort in them, creating is just not your thing. Effort doesn't equal greatness. Quantity isn't quality. I wonder how being an Bassist is treating you? But you are right!!! Ninja's should be well rounded. Let's see, Deidara is a long range fighter but let's make him well rounded by giving him leet taijutsu. Sasori should have great taijutsu also. Better yet, they should have genjutsu also. Let's give shikimaru, and temari great taijutsu also. They should have healing powers too. Now they are so well rounded. Kankuro is a medium range fighter and he doesn't have any taijutsu also. Let's give him one too. But how is he going to control the puppets with his arms while fighting with his hands and spinning around? F' that! It doesn't need to make sense. He can do both. Let's make all characters bland. Let's all give them taijutsu, ninjutsu and genjutsu. Let's make them all well rounded. All medical ninja's are now leet taijutsu specialists with genjutsu powers. Hey, it doesn't need to make sense, we don't need any color in this world. Let's make them all well rounded. Last edited by FuzzyWuzzy; 2008-07-10 at 10:51. |
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2008-07-10, 19:46 | Link #2297 | |
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@Fuzzy: As ridiculous as thisis going to sound to everyone else, the man/boy/sideshow freak makes some interesting points at times. As much as I respect your point of view and the opinions you give, I honestly am asking you to either tone down (without removing the criticism) or Shut Up. Really.
Criticism is meant to be constructive, not condescending and that's all your criticism is, despite the points you give across. Plus, the ONE character, jutsu or creation of any kind that you have given us was, by many peoples standards, only average. Like it said somewhere in the bible: Quote:
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2008-07-10, 20:07 | Link #2298 |
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I get where I made the mistake. You wrote, "When he arrived ...". I looked back and I couldn't identify where he actually arrived. It makes sense to me now but I'm not so sure if it would make sense to someone reading it for the first time. Maybe you should write something like, "When he arrived at the Leaf ....". Though I may have made another mistake . If I have sorry.
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2008-07-10, 22:26 | Link #2299 |
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Hey guys, I know that you are all ready to hear Sakeme's jutsus, but before I do so I have to explain a vital resource for her jutsu-the Itonami water or "Life" water. To give a short history of the water, it was discovered shortly after the Hidden Mist was founded. The water was found at a spring several miles out of the village. The water looked absolutely normal to everyone who passed by it until one day a ninja died an hour after drinking a large dosage of the water. The ninjas as well as the villagers wondered what could have caused his demise. After performing an autopsy on the body, it was discovered that the water and its unique but lethal properties were the cause of death. The medical ninjas reported to the Mizukage that the water had wiped out all of the ninja's chakra along with his remaining energy. They went on to say that the deadly water traveled through the chakra's circulatory system unlike regular water which travels through the urinary system. The water proved to react to the ninja's chakra, intensifying as the flow of chakra intensified more and more in the ninja's body. It also reacted to the chakra by slowly eating it away depending on the amount of Itonami water that has been drunk. Since the ninja drank such a large quantity, the water ate his chakra quickly and moved on to his remaining energy. With no energy to provide for simple bodily functions, such as a heart beat, he died. The Itonami not only affects the human body, but also water as well. A single drop of Itonami water will dilute in regular water and turn it into a weaker, yet potent form of Itonami water called "Itonami Subistitute"."Itonami Substitute" has half the power and effects of its predecessor. The information gained by the medical specialists was recorded and put away in a confidential section. As for the spring, the Mizukage ordered that it be destroyed and that no one go near the area ever again. As time passed, the people forgot about the "Itonami" water and the incident that occurred until one day Sakeme Hisakata found a cave outside the village. After exploring the cave, she discovered a small pool of water inside it. Thirsty, Sakeme cupped her hands and filled her hands with the water. The water glowed a blueish color and she noticed this luckily before she drank it. Sakeme dropped the water and left the cave in confusion. The water's glow was imprinted in her mind and she could not think of anything else but the water she had found. Several days later, as she was training with Elder Obaasan, she told her mentor about what had happened. Elder Obaasan gave a surprised look on her face and was reluctant to tell Sakeme what she knew. Sakeme could tell that Elder Obaasan knew about the water and after using her Wangetsugan on her teacher, Sakeme learned of the ninja's death and the water that killed him (Elder Obaasan was a child when the incident occurred). Elder Obaasan knew that Sakeme had seen her memories and urged her apprentice not to research into the water any further. Sakeme did not reply to this and went on to learn more about the "Itonami" water by reading the records made about it. To avoid bringing any conflicts in the village, Sakeme went and made a base in the cave where she began to develop forbidden techniques that involved the water.
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As a guitarist, I will tell you guys something about creativity. There's no room in it for loathing, hate, discrimination or self-proclaimed perfection. Only thing an artist or creator needs to think of is improvement. It's not my fault you guys have delusions of perfection. You come here hoping people will see the way you see your own work. It won't happen till you write out your thoughts clearly and express them clearly. Having people compliment you on your work when you just realize that your work is crap and doesn't make sense, then you will realize, they don't really understand your work, they are just complimenting you so you can compliment them back cause their delusions of perfection is hungry for attention. It's fake and half lies! It's the world you guys live in. A world for the blind. You guys are lucky, I'm giving it honestly and asking nothing in return. |
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