Nanoha FanFiction Discussion - Page 1390

2010-11-07, 23:18

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DezoPenguin

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Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

Yaris! Glad to see her back in action!

I love my OCs...and since "Echoes" takes place well before StrikerS, she exists in "canon-based" fics as well as both established AUs ("Steel Queen Chronicle" and Shadowverse) that I write.

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Something I noticed, though, is that you seem to be implying that she's younger than her age from Sunset on... now I'm curious if you chose to do that for any particular reason!

That is...

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Originally Posted by deathcurse

I absolutely loved Lutecia's entrance

. (Those were really young gangsters, if they're younger than Lutecia's 19-20?) I like how you set the story (presumably) before the whole Sunset arc, since it's always nice to see Lutecia during her "prime of her career" stage

, as the story will be full of that action and secrecy that isn't present in RB's later storyline (as most of RB's stories post-Shadow/Sunset are more emotional/psychological stories).

Edit: Oh ho ho ho ho ho ho ho! Pageclaim for Lutecia, in all her canon and fanon incarnations!

...Yep; I wanted to do a story with Lutecia on a field mission. I can't set that post-"Shadow" because she's in breakdown mode and RB hasn't yet set what Lulu's actually going to do with her life after that.

(Thanks for noting the typo; I'm surprised that there weren't many, many more...)

Oh, and the Night Breakers are young because they're not really a "criminal gang" in the sense of, well, like Conall's black-marketeers. They're a street gang, so they've got members starting in the 12-13 range and running on up into their 20s

Last edited by DezoPenguin; 2010-11-07 at 23:19. Reason: Rider. 'Nuff said.

2010-11-08, 01:46	Link #27782
Nanya01 Left for TFF Author Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: Frozen Hell of the North Age: 41	Season 1 A's Part 1 - 5 A's Part 6 A's Part 7 A's Part 8 Spoiler for Blood That Flows - A's Part 9: As she looked at Fate's unconscious form, Lindy felt like screaming at that moment. "So, we have this Mazoku Priest running around... These masked people helping the Wolkenritter, the Wolkenritter trying to complete the Book of Darkness and we have no freaking idea what's going to happen next?" No one had any answer for her. Fate chose that moment to wake up. "Ugh..." Lindy smiled as she saw that. Well, at least that Resurrection spell that Yuuno knew was potent enough to fully recover Linker Cores. When Fate asked if she was well enough to leave, Lindy nodded at her. "Just take it easy for a day if you can?" Fate nodded as she got out of bed and smiled at Lindy. "Thank you." (---) Later that night... Nanoha looked around. "What..?" She gasped as the darkness was lifted, and she saw Vita and Signum standing around a throne chair of some faceless man, but still, she could tell he was grinning at her. For some odd reason, Signum and Vita were wearing that same outfit that Princess Leia had wore in the final movie. Her eyes widened as she saw Fate and Yuuno, both chained up to the ceiling and over a hole. She tried moving, yelling, anything, but she couldn't do anything. "Look at you. Weak and helpless." She heard a man's voice, before the man on the throne snapped his fingers. Nanoha watched helplessly as Fate and Yuuno were lowered down and disappeared. The floor cleared up and Nanoha's eyes widened as she saw some sort of creatures under the ground assaulting her friends. "Too weak, you can watch as the tentacle creature rapes Fate to death, as for Yuuno..." He chuckled and Nanoha screamed as his body was torn to shreds. She could hear Fate's screams as her body was horribly violated by the creatures below. "It's too bad. If only you had the power. If you only had the strength to stop me." Nanoha's eyes widened, she gritted her teeth even as her magic circle finally appeared under her feet, gold in color. "You... You... WILL PAY!" "YES!" He started laughed as her hair started to slowly turn gold. "You're pathetic! Just a little girl who can't do anything and her friends always pay the price for your mistakes." Nanoha couldn't hear him anymore, her whole mind was blank, all she wanted to do was make this guy pay for what he did. "Yes... Lose control... Of EVERYTHING!" The last thing that Nanoha knew was a golden sheen covering her vision. (---) "Nanoha! Nanoha!" She was shaken from her nightmare. "Nanoha!" Her eyes snapped open, and her breathing was labored as she stared straight ahead. "Yu..uuno...kun... Fa...ate....chan..?" She saw her two friends looking at her both worried and scared. "Uh... nnngh..." She hiccuped once, twice, before lunging forward and wrapping her arms around them tightly. "UWWAAAAAHHHHHH!!!" Her body trembled as tears fell down her face, her body shook as she sobbed as Fate and Yuuno hugged her tightly as they tried to get her to calm down. The two whispered to her, telling her it was alright and that she would be okay. (---) "Damn!" She snapped her hands. That girl had been so close to cutting loose! Her eyes had almost been fully changed in color too! "Oh well." She sighed and disappeared before reappearing inside a different house. Being quiet while everyone slept was easy for a Mazoku, especially a Priest like her. Not tripping any of the pathetic human defenses was just as easy. "There you are." She whispered as she grabbed the Book of Darkness and opened it up. She smirked as she saw it actually filling itself up. "So it seems that the Chaos did something to you after all." She chuckled, but remembered her master's warning to be careful. Oh well, she was getting bored of this and wanted to see what would happen when the master of the book lost control. Her eyes flashed as she started to pump magic into the book. She grimaced as it greedily sucked her power, before stopping and falling to a knee, panting. "Damn human remnants..." She grumbled before closing the book. There was only three pages left to fill. Standing up, she felt a bit weak, but knew that she'd recover in a few hours at most. "The advantages of being able to feed off of emotions." The Chaos that was going to come tomorrow... On Christmas... That was going to be so much fun! I WAS going to have a Lina vs Wolkenritter fight. But after I wrote it, I realized it was stupid, so I had to delete it. __________________ My fics Due to certain things, I am not here, find me over on TFF.

2010-11-08, 06:03

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Blood That Flows - A's Part 9:

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"Oh well, she was getting bored of this and wanted to see what would happen when the master of the book lost control. Her eyes flashed as she started to pump magic into the book."

That shouldn't work. The BoD consumes Linker Cores, not merely magical energy. Were that the case, the Wolkenritter would have tried to scrounge up a magic generator to hook up to the Book and not gather Linker Cores.

2010-11-08, 08:58

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Moczo

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Originally Posted by Nanya01

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I WAS going to have a Lina vs Wolkenritter fight.

But after I wrote it, I realized it was stupid, so I had to delete it.

All right. I just gotta say... I find that Priest girl insufferable on a level I rarely find villains, and am deeply looking forward to her comeuppance.

Beyond that, the prospect of Reinforce, already a walking nuke, amped up on Chaos magic and now with the mana (And spells?) of a Mazoku Priest added in? Yes please.

2010-11-08, 08:59

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In my defense, Mazoku aren't human, so, for this, they don't have Linker Cores, since they ARE magical energy.

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2010-11-08, 10:44

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RadiantBeam

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Originally Posted by DezoPenguin

Unless you take a page from my book and send her out on a field mission when she's still trying to figure herself out and only making it worse, aka the whole plot of Long Distance Goodbye.

But I don't think Vivio would appreciate Lutecia pulling the same trick a second time.

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2010-11-08, 12:45	Link #27787
Nanya01 Left for TFF Author Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: Frozen Hell of the North Age: 41	And, here we go! The big reveal.... Well, one of them... Just WHAT did that Chaos blast DO to the Wolkenritter back in part 1? now we find out. Season 1 A's Part 1 - 5 A's Part 6 A's Part 7 A's Part 8 A's Part 9 Spoiler for Blood That Flows - A's Part 10: "Nanoha-chan! Fate-chan! Yuuno-kun!" The three kids blinked and turned to see Suzuka and Arisa waving at them. "Arisa-chan. Suzuka-chan." Nanoha smiled, but it was strained, she was certain that her friends knew it. Fate blinked as she saw the flowers that Suzuka and Arisa had. "What's with the flowers?" "We're going to go see a friend of ours at the hospital." Suzuka smiled. "Her name's Hayate Yagami and she's really nice. You three will like her." The three blinked in confusion, before Arisa sighed. "You know, this is why all those older Shonen anime heroes live as hermits for most of their lives. Training takes away any chance they have for a social life." "I sent you a text and picture of her, Nanoha-chan." Suzuka took a close look at Nanoha and saw that her eyes were blood-shot, she was twitching slightly, and seemed to flinch from everything, only calming down when Fate or Yuuno touched her on the shoulder. "You look terrible, have you been sleeping properly?" "Just bad dreams." Nanoha sighed softly. "How about we go see your friend?" Maybe meeting someone new would help get her mind off of the dreams she had been having? Arisa narrowed her eyes and puffed out her cheeks. "Nanoha!" The redhead blinked as Arisa pulled her into a headlock. "Ite! Suzuka-chan!" "I don't know what's going on, but it's more than simple dreams, isn't it?!" Her left eye was closed as Nanoha started waving her hands up and down comically. After a few moments of that, Arisa let go of Nanoha, before hugging the girl. "We worry about you, dummy. If you're scared or hurting or worried, let us know, we'll help you." Nanoha blinked, but slowly hugged Arisa back. "I'm sorry, Arisa-chan." She felt Yuuno and Fate touch her shoulders and even Suzuka got close enough to squeeze her hand. "Everyone, thank you." She sniffled, tears leaking out of her eyes. For some reason, just having her friends around her made the huge burden she was dealing with feel much lighter than before. (---) Hayate smiled at her Knights. "I'm fine, Dr. Ishida says that I'm coming along nicely." She hated the hospital, but knew that she needed to be here. She was about to say something more when there was a knock on the door. "Yes?" "Hayate-chan!" A familiar and welcome voice spoke up. "Suzuka-chan! Arisa-chan!" Hayate smiled as they walked in. "How are you two?" "Good." Arisa smiled at her. "We even managed to find our friends that we promised to introduce you to. Come on in, guys." Nanoha, Fate and Yuuno stepped in and gasped slightly as they saw Shamal and Signum standing opposite of them. Nanoha turned and blanched slightly as she saw Vita almost glaring at her. "She's the master?" "I guess so, Nanoha. What do you think, Yuuno?" "I'm thinking that this world is far too weird at times." Despite the fact that Nanoha thought that the Wolkenritter were going to do something rash, they seemed rather calm. Seemed was the abject word, she could see Shamal fingering something on her hands and Signum seemed to shift every few seconds. "Why are you here?" Nanoha blinked at Vita's question. The girl looked like she was about to do something stupid and soon. "Didn't know that you would be here. We didn't know that she was your master either. We just were spending time with our friends and they wanted to come here." Vita seemed to want to snort, but she seemed to calm down just a little bit. "Um, can you please stop looking at me like that?" Nanoha gulped as Vita seemed to get pretty upset at that. "I can't help that I was born with these eyes." Vita said through gritted teeth. Nanoha looked down, she wasn't sure what to say to that. "OW!" "Now, now..." Hayate pinched Vita's nose. "You don't need to be rude, Vita-chan." "Solly." Hayate smiled and let go of her nose. "Just don't be rude to people you haven't met before, it's not nice." Nanoha almost felt like laughing at that. The girl that had busted her ribs was looking like a little child being scolded by her mother. Sure was an interesting change from when they fought. She, Fate and Yuuno all tensed up as Signum mentally told them to meet them on the rooftop of the hospital. This wasn't going to end well. (---) "Now you know who our master is..." Signum felt her voice cracking. They were so close to completing the book. "You know that we cannot let you go." "Signum..." Fate said softly as the Knight, tears falling down her face, shifted into her battle outfit. "She is our master, whom we love very, very much." Shamal was likewise shifting into her outfit. "You don't understand how far we will go for her." Yuuno grimaced at that. "Look! We can help her! Nanoha's mother knows more about magic than anyone! If the Book of Darkness really did something to her, I'm sure that she can help fix it!" "YAAAAAAH!" Nanoha looked up as Vita came out of nowhere and slammed her hammer onto her quickly thrown up barrier, before throwing Nanoha back into a barrel, which exploded, a large fire getting kicked up in the process. "We won't... Let you take her away from us!" Vita was crying freely, even with the angry look on her face. She paled slightly as Nanoha walked through the fire in her Barrier Jacket. "You... Devil." "Is that so?" Nanoha said softly. "Then I'll take on that name, the White Devil, and make you submit." Raising Heart shifted into its staff form as she looked at Vita. "I'll give you a performance worthy of the White Devil title." That was all that was needed as Nanoha and Vita took off into the air and Fate decided to not play around, activating her Sonic Form against Signum. "You made a thin armor even thinner?" Signum was perplexed and Fate nodded. "It was the only way I could make sure that I wasn't hit by your attacks." Despite her bravado, Fate felt a chill of anticipation... ...Or maybe that was the sudden breeze that managed to get under her armor? The goosebumps and the other effects the cold had on her body was a little distracting, but nothing she couldn't deal with. "Foolish. A single hit will take you out completely." Still, Signum wouldn't hold back against her, not when they were so close. Yuuno hovered just above Shamal, a sphere of fire forming in his hands even as the wind started to kick up around Shamal. Everyone was tense, ready to move, to strike, when suddenly binds started wrapping around all of them. "What the?" In the air, Nanoha gasped slightly as she and Vita were securely fastened by the binds that sprung up. "What?" "Nnngh... Dammit!" Vita grumbled as she found that she couldn't move. "What a time for outside interference." Everyone looked as not one, but two masked people appeared, one of them was holding several cards, his hands wide as they were bound up, the other one had the Book of Darkness open. "Interesting, they got a lot more than I thought they did. There's only a page left to fill." "It doesn't matter." The one who was holding up everyone commented. "Just reabsorb them into the Book." "Of course, just..." He grabbed a flying kick from Zafira, before flying down and slamming him into the rooftop. "Just needed to do that." He held up the Book of Darkness. "Now! Recombine with the book, you broken programs." Everyone waited with baited breath. And waited... And waited... "What the hell?" The one with the book looked at it. "That's not possible, they should have been reabsorbed into the book." "The only way they couldn't have been is..." The one with the binds trailed off and looked at Signum, who was starting to get free. "Is if they're human." "But that's not possible." But, yet, the Linker Cores of the Wolkenritter weren't being re-absorbed by the book. "Ngh, well, whatever, just knock them out, we'll have to improvise for phase two then." (---) "Oh, so that's what the Chaos did to them." The Priest smirked to herself. "Severed their connection with the Book and turned them into real beings, huh?" As she watched them knock the Wolkenritter out and the two masked people take on forms resembling Nanoha and Fate, she chuckled. This was going to be a barrel of laughs, especially after they summoned the master in front of them. "I wonder if I can kill them now." "Not yet." Her eyes widened and she spun to come face to face with her master. "...M..master! What brings you here?" He smirked at her. "Just want to see how this will end." Plus he needed to get the final plans into place and he wanted to know the last few details. "I wonder, will they kill her? Will she kill them?" Oh well, if worst came to worst, he would just grab the little Chaos generator and go back to Mid-Childa with her. (---) "Vita-chan..? Signum..? Shamal..? Zafira..?" Hayate gasped as she lay there, looking at her family. In front of her was the Book of Darkness. "Look at them... So pathetic, they couldn't even stop us from killing them." 'Nanoha' said to her. "If the master is pathetic, do you think that the servants would be any different?" 'Fate' questioned her. "Oh well, all that's left for us to do is take the bodies and..." She trailed off as Hayate, tears falling down her face, looked up into the air and screamed as a black Belkan triangle appeared under her and the book started to fully power up. "Time to go. 'Nanoha' nodded as the two took off and shifted back into their masked forms. "Do you have Durandall?" "Of course," The first one held up a card. "When she fully activates, we'll..." He trailed off as he and his companion were wrapped up in binds. Above them was Chrono, looking very dispassionately, and Lina, who was looking at them calmly, well, as calmly as one could look while lightning and fire crackled around her body. "These are Struggle Binds." Chrono said softly. "They'll cancel all magic on you and make you reveal your true selves." As the masks fell off and the forms shifted, his eyes widened slightly. "Aria!? Lotte?!" "You know them?" Lina shot him a look and he nodded at her. "Yes, they were my old teachers in magic." She snorted and dropped to the roof. "Start speaking, right now." She grabbed them by their throats and slammed them against the chain link fence behind them. "If you don't I'll see what two familiars look like when I blast their guts all over the rooftop." The two gulped and started explaining everything. "So..." Lina felt disgusted by what she had heard. "Your plan was to have the master of, get this, a very, VERY dangerous artifact, lose her temper... Merge with the artifact... Then seal it way in ice somewhere?" They nodded at that. "Did it ever occur to you that there might be a couple problems with that? Like, I dunno, she might be too POWERFUL for you to seal away? Or, you know, she might have a spell that could wipe out entire cities with ease?! Or the fact that you used MY daughter's likeness to piss her off?!" "Lina..." Chrono grabbed her shoulder. "Please, we need them alive..." She snorted and dropped the two. "Fine, I won't kill them..." She turned to walk away. "But..." She looked back with her eyes flashing in the dark. "We WILL be having words later, I guarantee it." The two catgirl familiars gulped at the look in her eyes, they didn't like it. __________________ My fics Due to certain things, I am not here, find me over on TFF.

2010-11-08, 16:16	Link #27788
Nanya01 Left for TFF Author Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: Frozen Hell of the North Age: 41	Moczo, I think you're right. One part in an hour, the next part in 3 or so hours after that. XD Season 1 A's Part 1-10 Spoiler for Blood That Flows - A's Part 11: Shiro looked out the window and sighed softly. "Dad?" Miyuki looked at him. "You okay?" He nodded, sighing softly. "I'm just worried... That one or the other won't be coming back this time." "Enough of that!" Miyuki yelled and walked up to her father. "Listen, dad. Our family motto is to never give up, right?" He nodded at that. Well, that was part of the motto at least. "If there's even a chance that they can come back, you know mom will find a way to turn 1% into 100%, she's like that." Shiro smiled softly and nodded. "Yeah. I trust them, I do. I just can't help but worry about them." Miyuki smirked at him. "Well, when they get home, we can chain them to the bed or something to keep them from leaving all the time, but for now, let's make a large meal for them, Fate-chan and Yuuno-kun, okay?" "You're only saying that because you want mom and dad to adopt those two." Kyouya laughed as Miyuki blushed and yelled at him. "What? You always did want more younger siblings to play with." Shiro chuckled at that. To be honest, he was seriously considering adopting Fate, who had no family at all. As for Yuuno, he wasn't sure, but he did like the kid. Oh well, at the very least, those two were semi-permanent houseguests unless they decided to move out or do something else. (---) Nanoha, Fate and Yuuno stared at the transformed Hayate, her eyes had turned red, her hair silver, she had gained a few feet, hips and breasts, as well as a nice set of wings on the back as she looked at them. "You two... Would hurt my master so..." She then looked at the Knights on the ground near her feet. "Noble Knights, I promise that your lives were not given in vain." Her legs tensed before she shot up into the air, targeting Nanoha. "Freeze!" Yuuno yelled, several ice spikes forming and launching at the transformed Hayate, who threw up a barrier and blocked them with ease, before returning fire with a lightning bolt, only to find that he had a barrier up to block it. "Photon Raging Bolt." Their opponent looked up, just in time to get several electrical bolts crash into her body, making her twitch and spasm as she fell out of the sky slightly. "Photon Destroyer." She whispered and held up an open palm. The crackle of lightning was ungodly loud as Fate took the lightning attack dead on, stunning her and causing her to fall. She would have fallen out of the sky completely had Yuuno not grabbed her. "Nanoha!" He yelled, before pointing a palm at the winged woman. "Fireball!" She swung her hand up through the fireball and fired a red dagger of energy from the tips of her fingers. "Bloody dagger." "Enough!" Nanoha yelled. "Diem Wind!" The winged woman looked up and threw a barrier up, but the kinetic and wind forces were strong enough to send her flying back several feet. "Enough is right." She closed her eyes. "Then all shall fall..." Cupping her hands in front of her, she began to chant. "Master of the Dark Sky, you who dwell upon the Azure Abyss. Oh, ruler of the paths of Life and Death. May the souls of those that oppose us be swept upon the maelstrom of thy wrath! Let the fools who stand before me be destroyed, by the power you and I possess." Nanoha, Fate and Yuuno all stared wide-eyed as they heard the chant. "MOVE!" Yuuno yelled as the three of them took off, moving as fast as they could. They had seen what this had done to the Garden of Time, none of them wanted to be anywhere near it when it went off. (---) Lina watched and twitched as she saw the spell being cast. "Damn." The only thing keeping her from interfering at that moment was that she was trembling with anger. At least that woman had enough intelligence to cast that dimensional barrier thing that all the mages seemed to enjoy using. "Aren't you going to help?" She nearly jumped at Lindy's voice, before shaking her head. "Not yet. I trust Nanoha, I want to see what she can do before I have to step in." (---) "Sir. There are civilians nearby." "What?!" Fate gasped even as they looked back and saw the blue ball starting to get larger. "What is she waiting for?" "No clue." Nanoha muttered as they got to where Bardiche said there were civilians. "You two! Just stay there, please? It's dangerous!" "N...Nanoha?" Suzuka blinked as Nanoha, in some sort of white garment, landed in front of them and several pink circles appeared in front of her. "Defensor." Bardiche said as the girls were enclosed in a golden dome. Fate nodded and threw several barriers in front of Nanoha's. Yuuno landed next to them and added his own barriers to the mix. The three of them weren't sure if it was enough, but they sure hoped it was. (---) The winged girl opened her eyes. "It's time... Nemesis Breaker." She thrust her palms forward and the blue sphere moved forward at an incredible speed, before striking the ground, destroying many of the buildings and ground as the blue sphere of destruction grew in size, quickly encompasing most of the area. (---) "Nnngh!" Lina covered her eyes from the large blue glow. "She's crazy!" "Are you okay?" "I'm fine! You're sure that none of this will transfer over after the barrier drops?" "Yes." "Good, because THIS would be a pain to explain to everyone." (---) "Ohhohohoho!" She laughed as she watched the destruction. "Lord Chaotic Blue? I didn't think anyone knew how to use his power!" Death Bringer just... Smiled. This was going perfectly. (---) As the spell subsided, the three kids fell to their knees, panting. No wonder Lina hadn't wanted to teach them that spell at all. Looking up, all five kids gaped at the destruction. In front of them was nothing more than a giant crater, no buildings, no people (not that there had been people to begin with), nothing. "Nanoha... THAT is your mom's spell?!" Yuuno gasped as they got to their feet. Nanoha nodded, before it hadn't seemed like a bad idea, but this was crazy! Fate nodded and turned to Suzuka and Arisa and smiled softly. "Don't worry, we'll get you out of here." She, Yuuno and Nanoha were startled as the winged woman appeared in front of them. "Now that you see what you are up against, do you wish to just lay down quietly so I can kill you for what you did to those poor knights?" "Yuuno-kun, go check on Vita and the others." Nanoha said to him softly. "You're better at healing than I am, I want to make sure that they're okay." Yuuno nodded and took off, strangely, the woman didn't stop him from leaving the area. "My fight is with you two, not him." A tear fell down her face. "Those knights were the only people to bring my master happiness, and you stole them away from her." "No!" Nanoha shook her head. "Book of Darkness!" "You would call me by that name?" She asked, narrowing her eyes as a black sphere appeared in her hands. "Bardiche, Sonic Form now!" "Sonic Drive." As Fate shifted to her faster form, she looked at the woman. "Listen! Release the armor, book! That girl, she doesn't want any of this!" "How do you know what my master wants? All she wants is a place where tragedy like what you did can never happen again." Fate growled softly. "You brat!" "Sonic move." "Listen..." Fate's newly formed wings on her arms and legs flapped a couple of times. "To us!" She yelled as she rushed forward at tremendous speeds. "No, you listen." The woman held the book forward just as Fate's weapon crashed into a barrier. "You shall be absorbed into me and dream a dream for all time." "Fate! NO!" Nanoha screamed as Fate's body started sparkling with light, before she disappeared. "Absorption." Nanoha stared, her body went cold as she stared at the flying woman. "Everything will fall into a tranquil slumber." The woman closed her eyes. Before anything more could be said, a sphere of fire crashed into the woman's backside, causing her to turn around, where she saw Lina glaring at her. "Listen you, I don't really care just what or who you are, but to go and blow up my city, turn a girl that my family likes into nothingness AND threaten my daughter?! That's just going too far." She pointed dramatically at the woman. "And who are you?" She looked at Lina curiously. "I'm Lina Takamachi, and you'll soon fear that name!" "Nanoha! Lina! Listen! Fate's not dead, she's still alive somehow. If you can figure out how to release her, she'll come back to us." They heard Amy's voice and Nanoha smiled at that, at least Fate wasn't dead. "The Wolkenritter are fine, they're just a little sleepy. I'll get them awake soon." Lina flew down and extended a hand to her daughter, smiling at her. "You know, Nanoha, this is your fight, if you want to do this alone, go ahead." "Mom..." "But..." Lina grinned and Nanoha was certain if this were an anime, a theme music power up would be starting to play right now. "I wouldn't mind fighting with you." Nanoha nodded. "Please!" "Call me, Excellion, Master." Nanoha looked at her device. "Are you sure?" "Call me." Lina giggled softly. "Seems she wants to join in, I say we let her." Nanoha nodded. "Excellion Mode!" "Set up!" Raising Heart became more spear-like instead of staff like and Lina nodded in approval. "So, how about it?" "Alright!" Nanoha nodded to her. The two turned to look at the flying woman, who actually had was trembling in fear somewhat. "What is this?" She gasped as the two took off, seemingly disappearing before reappearing right in front of her. "BOMB!" Lina started. "DI!" Nanoha continued as the two held their hands back. "WIND!" The two screamed at the same time, punching forward and launching a supremely powerful wind sent her flying out of the city and onto the surface of the ocean, skidding along the surface, before tumbling end over end and righting herself, only to look up as several red fireballs were launched at her. Throwing up her shield, she grimaced as they were blocked, but just barely. Her eyes widened as she saw a pink beam crash into, and through her barrier, slamming her in the chest and down into the water. "Freeze bullet!" Lina yelled as she fired several small ice blasts at the water, quickly encasing it in a thick cover. "Wow..." Nanoha was surprised how fast her mother had done that. "Heh, before you were born, I spent time exterminating demons. Learned how to use flight magic and attack magic at the same time." Granted, it was still better for her to be standing still for stuff like the Nemesis Breaker, but she didn't need to anymore. Of course, the kickback was rather fierce and she really didn't like having to fly over four miles to get back to where she was before she fired the spell in the first place. (---) "Did they win?" She asked her master, who merely smirked at her. "Oh, trust me, this isn't over by a long shot, not yet. (---) The ice broke and the woman flew up, glaring at them, her black wings started to turn gold on her. "I will show you not to take me lightly!" Black lightning crackled around her and three more copies of her came into being. "For everything that's happened in the past..." Nanoha started to speak as she pointed Raising Heart outwards. "For all the lives that were lost fighting you..." Lina continued, lightning dancing at her fingertips. "For the sake of the future that we wish to live..." "Take this!" "All of our sorrow..." "Our love..." "And all of our friendship!" Nanoha finished as the two grinned at the clones, who were wondering what they were planning to do. "Blast ASH!" Lina yelled, sniping one clone, putting several holes in its body as Nanoha pointed at another clone. "Excellion... BUSTER!" "Barrel Shot!" The remaining two narrowed their eyes and called up more clones, this time, the clones had fire flowing from their hands. "You cannot win as you are." "Unfortunately for you, you have no idea who you're dealing with!" Lina smirked at them. "I'll never give up." "I will never surrender." Nanoha continued for her mother as she gripped Raising Heart tightly. "And you will lose!" The woman's wings were glowing golden by that point. "We shall see." Spoiler for Short notes: The Theme music powerup is "Plenty of Grit", which is Slayers Revolution opening. __________________ My fics Due to certain things, I am not here, find me over on TFF.

2010-11-08, 20:21

Link #27789

Moczo

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Moczo, I think you're right. One part in an hour, the next part in 3 or so hours after that. XD

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I'm usually right. Comes with being great. And humble.

Okay, looks like Chaos Reinforce is getting ready to really show off. I'd be lying if I said I haven't been looking forward to this for... well, since the idea was first introduced. And, of course... Mother-Daughter Team Up! Whoo-hoo!

2010-11-08, 20:33	Link #27790
shiroi mahotsukai Under Death by College Author Join Date: May 2010 Location: Where you least expect me Age: 30	I can see this story ending very badly for all involved, I mean look at all the power being unleashed here. This has the possibility to end horribly. __________________ "The eyes are the windows that let us gaze upon the soul" "When desperate there are two choices: Lock shields for the last stand or draw your sword for the final charge" "There are no winners or losers, there are only the living and the dead."

2010-11-08, 20:49	Link #27791
deathcurse Queen of Tragedy Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: Place of rocks and trees, and trees and rocks...and water. Age: 33	Since RB's Shadowverse seems to be back lately, I thought I'd drop out of my NaNoWriMo haze to offer an update ^^. Back to the Shadows! Auris starts to put some pieces of the mystery together...but who's tricking who? Crime Never Sleeps Part 12 “The worst things we do are always by our own choice.” Spoiler for Crime Never Sleeps, part 12: “I encountered something interesting when I was digging around about the mayor,” Jian reported, sitting in front of Auris’ desk and flipping through an open folder laid out between them. It was technically never “after hours” in the NSIS branch, but convention dictated a stand-down on protocol after normal office hours. So Auris slid a cup of coffee over to Jian before sipping at her own mug, nodding for her agent to continue her report. Jian left her coffee untouched and said, “It seems like someone else had gotten there first.” That surprised Auris. “Who?” “I couldn’t find anything about the other intruder…that kind of subtlety isn’t common, so I’m guessing that it was one of us.” “A Shadow?” “I think it’s Alphine.” Jian told her flatly. “Yagami must have some Shadows loyal to her—all the overseers do.” Auris was well aware of that fact—the ones that did it for under-the-table money weren’t a concern, but the ones who worked out of personal loyalty were. Those people Auris watched very carefully. Emotions were more unpredictable than money, after all. “Alphine’s the obvious choice. She’s the girlfriend of Yagami’s niece, the Sankt Kaiser, after all.” Jian smirked. “Probably more than friends, if the gossip is right.” “So Hayate’s already looking into the mayor herself,” Auris mused, letting this new bit of information turn in her mind, shifting her many plans and potential ideas around the additional facts. “Which records have been looked into?” “Mostly financial ones…his campaign accounts, as well as some smaller money in-flows that aren’t accounted for elsewhere.” Jian flicked her hair back then passed a sheet of accounts to Auris. “Probably a classic attempt to cover up anonymous sponsor sources, but possibly something else.” “Can you find out who they are?” “It’s beyond my skills,” Jian apologized. “I can speculate, from the information that I gathered so far on the two overseers, that the money comes from them, but I have no proof. You’ll need a computer specialist.” Auris looked at the account sheets thoughtfully. Maybe it was time for her to test out Alvar Lonsdale’s loyalties, and see if he would be interested in joining in with his boss… “Leave that for now. What else?” “The mayor appears to spend a lot of time visiting the Cranagan Corrections Program centre, even though his official standing as sponsor doesn’t warrant for that many visits.” Jian shuffled through the papers again and pulled out a stack of pictures and personal files. “Cross-referencing with the visitor’s log, I’ve pulled a list of the inmates he visits most often. Some of them will be familiar to you.” Auris flipped rapidly through the pictures, her eyes widening as she went. “Many of these kids are Shadows-in-training at the moment!” “Far too many for coincidence,” Jian nodded, pleased with herself. Auris drummed the tabletop with one hand, staring at the photos and thinking hard. “If Alphine was in those files, she’s probably handed this information to Hayate as well. What’s her game, I wonder…Hayate can’t use this information as proof herself, it’s outside of her authority to have these files…” Jian asked curiously, “Maybe Yagami is lying to you about her current relationship with the mayor? Perhaps they have a mutual agreement about this—Yagami has a lot of potential clout over the mayor’s reputation, with her influence on the Gallant Case.” “Of course she’s lying to me,” Auris grunted, pondering that theory. “Neither of us expects the other to reveal their full hand…the trick is giving each other enough to reach our shared objective while concealing enough to keep the upper hand on each other.” She gave that tip freely, since if things went well Jian Valiant may soon become one of Auris’ closer allies. It never hurt to have a second to watch her flanks when Auris had her attention on other domains. If Hayate really was plotting behind her back, then Auris might have to act pre-emptively on these issues. “Good work, Jian. Go home and get some sleep.” “Thank you.” She should be getting home herself, Auris noted, but her mind was racing too fast for rest. Walking over to her office whiteboard, she started scribbling over the surface in big black letters. Raven Gallant. Mayor Magnus. Corrections programs. NSIS Overseers. Bribes. Shadows. There was a theory in there somewhere. There had to be, if Hayate was so interested in it. Did Hayate even know what tied it all together, or was she investigating the mayor for some other reason? That could very well be true…But something told Auris that there was a connection in all this somewhere. Now all Auris had to do was figure it out first, and distract Hayate long enough for Auris to decide the first move. First though, she needed more information, and a means to feed Hayate enough half-true and misleading information to keep her off-balance long enough for Auris to work out what to do. And Auris knew just who she could use for that. O “Half-day medical leave?” Auris chuckled to herself as she checked her messages. It was ridiculous, how only five hours had passed since she had last checked her inbox, and she had fourteen unread messages already. “Signed by Shamal Yagami—My, Hayate, if you can’t keep up with the pressure, things are going to start slipping by you…” A beep on another monitor distracted her. She had set a flag on Alphine’s sign-in, and immediately Auris proceeded to send out a pre-set message on another terminal before typing to Alphine through the Shadows’ secure network, Gaiz: Alphine, report to my office. Alphine: Yes ma’am. Nearly immediately, there was a knock on Auris’ door. “Director?” “Come in, Alphine.” Auris indicated, and Lutecia marched in and stopped in front of her desk, standing at ease but in an attentive stance. She started with the inane pleasantries that supposedly made people view you more sympathetically. “How are you this morning?” “Fine, ma’am,” was the mild reply. “And yourself?” Oh, Lutecia was good at this game. She was one of the best Shadows here, after all. Auris smiled and answered, “Alright, though the Gallant Case has been tiring on both me and my partner. Although I seem to be better off than Hayate, overall.” Lutecia’s red eyes flickered in the low light for a moment. “Better off, ma’am?” “Hayate has been getting most of the political pressure,” Auris commented idly. “It’s clearly become a problem—she’s on medical leave today.” “I’ll send my sympathies to the Lieutenant-general,” Lutecia said, polite concern in her voice. “Would it be troubling for you, to work on the case alone today? Should I reschedule some of my cases and assist?” “Oh no, it’s not that bad,” Auris said, waving off the offer. “Keep your schedule, I simply wanted to talk for a few minutes.” “About what, ma’am?” “You’re friends with Hayate’s niece, aren’t you? And Hayate herself as well, I presume?” Lutecia was too canny an agent to show any kind of suspicion or concern on her face, but Auris did manage to detect an edge in her mellow reply. “Yes, we’re friends.” More than that, Auris thought in amusement. If Lutecia was avoiding saying that she and Vivio Takamachi were girlfriends (even if it really was common knowledge), then she must be really wary of what Auris might do with the confirmation. Although she was twenty-five, there was still something of a little girl in Lutecia when it came to fear. Still, Auris wouldn’t underestimate her—not the Shadow’s best assassin. “Look…I’m not pretending to be Yagami’s friend—but I need to know what kind of pressure she’s under, or else I can’t help her during these trials.” Auris kept her tone theatrically defensive enough to appear as if she was simply embarrassed to be caught caring for someone everyone knew she claimed to dislike. “She’s been skipping her meals again, as I’m sure you’ve noticed. If I can do something to direct some of the fire from her to me, it’ll be good for us in the long run.” A minute pause later, Lutecia said, “Hayate-san appears to be handling the stress well, ma’am.” “Of course,” Auris answered, nodding firmly. “But I suspect it’s wearing on her…” She took a guess. “…especially since her family and closest friends aren’t entirely supportive of her actions lately.” Raising her hands helplessly, Auris said, “I can always tell right after one of those confrontations…Hayate ends up working twice as hard all day as if to try and forget the incident.” Lutecia hesitated for another moment, her red eyes pensive, before she said slowly, “Most of them don’t agree with your stance on the case, but they’re mostly keeping silent about it. Nanoha-san is the most vocal about it, and Fate-san usually has to play mediator between them. But Hayate-san is handling it, ma’am, you don’t need to worry about her.” Her face completely controlled and neutral, Auris cheered inside her head. Success. “I see…Yagami mentioned Admiral Chrono once in passing, and she looked distressed when she did—is he putting pressure on her too?” Flinching slightly, Lutecia admitted, “Just a little. He mostly tries to convince her that she should follow what she believes to be right instead of what other people believe.” She shrugged, and Auris wasn’t quite sure if Lutecia was dismissing the moral dilemma as unimportant or if she disagreed with the Admiral’s way of thinking. Auris wanted to chuckle, but she stilled the impulse. Sifting through Lutecia’s diplomatic speech was easy. Clearly, Harlaown thought that Auris was influencing Hayate with her opinions. It would be easy to plant a seed of suspicion in his mind by having him “find out” that the whole plan was Hayate’s to begin with…it would give Auris a hidden weapon for later use. She kept that in mind. “Alphine, I know that you know Takamachi and Testa—sorry, I meant Harlaown. Could you maybe try and get them to convince Yagami to rest a little more?” Auris sighed, rubbing the bridge of her nose. “The Lieutenant-general is always first in and last out of the office, while also keeping on top of her own regular duties…she’s going to make herself sick at this rate. If you can have them let slip that I’ll pull a few extra over-times to make up for her to get a good night’s sleep...so that Hayate won’t think that I’m interfering.” Lutecia nodded. “I will.” “Thank you.” Auris nodded then waved a hand. “Dismissed.” Lutecia inclined her head in a polite salute before leaving, letting Auris’ door slide shut behind her. One of the excellent advantages of being the Shadows Director was premium access to the Bureau’s best gadgets and toys. Auris turned off her scrambler device—no current bug-detecting spells have been able to crack its shielding yet, although like everything else it’ll probably become obsolete in a few years. But by then, someone would have created a new device to serve its purpose as a counter-spy gadget. Auris opened a video screen to the live audio feed she had been transmitting under the scrambler’s shielding. “Lonsdale, send that recording to me and erase any other traces of it.” “Done, and shazam!” Alvar finished typing and winked at her. “It never existed. Gave me a chance to try out this new software-deleting program I wrote recently, what a great trial run—eluding the NSIS’s own computer-trail hunters.” He paused. “Hm, I’m one of those computer-trail hunters…” “So you’ll know what to expect from other people trying to hide their tracks,” Auris said wryly. She normally used these customary semi-illegal requests to tie the loyalty of her new allies to her through the shared guilt of committing a mild crime, but Alvar seemed to enjoy the challenge of covertly assisting her as a reward in and of itself. “Lonsdale, see if you can get a Shadow to drop some lines to Admiral Harlaown—the younger one—about Hayate’s initial files on Gallant. I just sent them to you. Not too obviously, but enough to have him turn his eye on her, understand?” “Can do,” Alvar replied, but he hesitated, pulling out a deck of cards. Auris eyed him curiously. Finally, after shuffling a few times, the man blurted out, “I think you’re underestimating her, ma’am. She knew something was up—half of her responses were lies.” “Alphine?” “Yes! Did you think that she would really believe that you cared personally about Yagami when you ordered her into your office as her superior?” “Damn,” Auris scowled, belatedly realizing why the whole interrogation had seemed too simple. “I forgot. I have to suppose then that Alphine had noticed that I’ve been feeding her information to pass on to Hayate lately…” She sometimes told the Shadows different things than what she reported to Hayate, just to see if she could catch Hayate in the act of having spies herself. Alphine had been an obvious suspect, but now Auris wasn’t quite so sure…it was far too obvious, and Auris was starting to realize that Hayate wasn’t quite so transparent as she appeared to be at first glance. But then why was Hayate so unsubtly using Alphine to run her errands? “Maybe, but it’s hard to tell.” Alvar performed a series of triple-cuts in his hands, his fingers flicking the cards around quickly. “She’s clever enough to catch that, but she might not have a chance to figure out if it’s truth or half-lies. You could still run circles around Yagami through using her as Yagami’s informant.” “At the same time, Hayate may be using her to give me false information,” Auris pointed out, considering Lutecia in a more cautious format now. “Or Alphine herself may use us both to her advantage.” “She’s not the type,” Alvar dismissed that, but his doubt showed on his face. “Tagus can keep an eye on Alphine for me,” Auris decided, tightening her tie. “She’s a bit sloppy, but she should be able to do the job after she’s finished with her current mission.” Smirking, Auris added, “And while she’s at it, maybe she could learn how to be more subtle from Alphine.” “Ah, do you want them on a mission together?” Tapping at his keyboard, Alvar glanced at something off-screen. “There are two unclaimed cases they could legitimately collaborate on together…” “No, that would be too obvious,” Auris cut in. “I’ll just get her to shadow Alphine for a while, to confirm what she’s up to.” She doubted that Tagus would actually succeed, since Lutecia was far too sharp not to notice that she was being watched. But who knows, she might get lucky. It also gave her an excuse to see if Clara Tagus would be an asset or a hindrance down the road… “Besides, I want Alphine free to complete whatever tasks she’s doing for Hayate.” And afterwards, she can decide whether or not Lutecia was even worth the risk of using as a go-between with Hayate. “Give the Lieutenant-General enough rope to hang herself with?” Alvar deduced, grinning. “She’s too clever to hang herself,” Auris answered, smiling coldly. “But I may want to use that rope one day.” Spoiler for Author's Note: Alright, this part isn't edited to the point that I'm pleased with, but I can't think of what else to do with it , so here it is! I had difficulty with Auris' lines, they seemed a mite cheesy--but that may be in character, since she finds it awkward to appear caring! This is the last bit that may have contained parts that appeared before, from here on out it's 100% new material! 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2010-11-08, 21:09

Link #27792

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Originally Posted by Nanya01

Moczo, I think you're right. One part in an hour, the next part in 3 or so hours after that. XD

Season 1

A's Part 1-10

Spoiler for Blood That Flows - A's Part 11:

Spoiler for Short notes:

And finally I have caught up on this! Damn, this chapter is really awesome. The awesome is doubled when listening to Plenty of Grit. But reading this chapter reminded me that I never really got why Reinforce absorbed Fate. I mean, wasn't she trying to kill her and Nanoha then suddenly Reinforce decides to give Fate what she thinks is a paradise?

I don't know, just never made sense to me.

2010-11-08, 21:39

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RadiantBeam

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Originally Posted by deathcurse

Since RB's Shadowverse seems to be back lately, I thought I'd drop out of my NaNoWriMo haze to offer an update ^^.

Back to the Shadows! Auris starts to put some pieces of the mystery together...but who's tricking who?

Crime Never Sleeps
Part 12

“The worst things we do are always by our own choice.”

Spoiler for Crime Never Sleeps, part 12:

Spoiler for Author's Note:

New Part 1-4A
New Part 4B
New Part 5: Trial Day 1A
New Part 5: Trial Day 1B
New Part 5: Trial Day 1C and New Part 6
New Part 7
Part 8 and Part 9: Trial Day 2
Part 10: Trial Day 2
Part 11

You know, somehow I get the feeling that if Vivio stood between Auris and Lutecia for whatever reason, the fur would fly.

Seriously, though, I recognize this part; I remember we discussed it quite in-depth back when you first started the fic, and I have to say, it's my favorite part so far.

There's something very subtle and kind of low-key about the interaction with Auris and Lutecia, though I do have to wonder how Lutecia will handle being shadowed by one of Auris's buddies.

So yeah, I cannot see this ending well. No surprise there.

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2010-11-08, 21:44

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deathcurse

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You know, somehow I get the feeling that if Vivio stood between Auris and Lutecia for whatever reason, the fur would fly.

Seriously, though, I recognize this part; I remember we discussed it quite in-depth back when you first started the fic, and I have to say, it's my favorite part so far.

There's something very subtle and kind of low-key about the interaction with Auris and Lutecia,

Yup, it's quite edited now, which I'm glad about since the beginning parts had changed drastically and ironically, this part matches retroactively quite well ^^.

I'm glad you liked it, it's good to know since something about it bugs me, but it may just be me

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though I do have to wonder how Lutecia will handle being shadowed by one of Auris's buddies.

Handle, as in respond with a knife into Tagus' back?

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2010-11-09, 06:11

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She paled slightly as Nanoha walked through the fire in her Barrier Jacket. "You... Devil."

"Is that so?" Nanoha said softly. "Then I'll take on that name, the White Devil, and make you submit."

I've been waiting for this. Given their previous experience with a truly demonic Nanoha, I would have expected Vita's lines to be a little different at least.

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"Oh, so that's what the Chaos did to them." The Priest smirked to herself. "Severed their connection with the Book and turned them into real beings, huh?"

You'd think that the Wolkenritter would have felt the loss of connection with the Book when it happened. One could put the case that the scene in A's ep 13 suggests they might not, but it's possible that they were just thinking they still needed to go to save Hayate.

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"You know them?" Lina shot him a look and he nodded at her.

"Yes, they were my old teachers in magic."

I think it might be a good idea if you put in some lines to let readers know whether or not certain scenes that took place in canon took place here too. In this case, Chrono and Yuuno's trip to the Infinite Library and the meeting with the Liezes.

2010-11-09, 07:58

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Since RB's Shadowverse seems to be back lately, I thought I'd drop out of my NaNoWriMo haze to offer an update ^^.

One thing I hate about NaNo is having ideas for my fics while I'm writing something completely different. But last time I gave into that temptation I lost

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Nanya01 Left for TFF Author Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: Frozen Hell of the North Age: 41	Here's part 12. Sorry if it disappoints any of you. Season 1 A's Part 1-10 A's Part 11 Spoiler for Blood That Flows - A's Part 12: "Nnngh... Where am I?" She asked as she looked around, in front of her, she saw a silver-haired woman with red eyes staring at her. Behind the silver-haired woman, she saw a golden glow, at her feet, a black sludge seemed to be covering her feet. "Just rest, master." (---) Yuuno frowned as he tried to wake up the Wolkenritter. "What's wrong with them?" This wasn't normal, they weren't moving at all. Something told him that there was more to it, and he wasn't seeing it. (---) Nanoha yelped as black fire escaped from the fingertips of their opponent, nearly burning her dress off in the process. "Ouch!" Her mother was facing down three clones, before freezing them in midair and quickly escaping. It didn't help as they broke out of the ice a moment later, their bodies changing forms. "Oh great, now they got tentacles coming out of their arms!" Lina groused as the misshaped clones attacked her, the tentacles generating various elements and causing explosions across the sky as they tried to hit her. "Genocide Destruction." The woman said softly as black spheres appeared in her hands, all of her hands as the other clones that didn't grow tentacles charged up attacks. "Protection." Nanoha grunted as the spheres crashed into her barriers, before exploding and forcing her back. "AHHH!" She blinked as her mother grabbed her and pulled her away from the explosion. "She's harder than I thought." Lina looked as the woman called up her magic circle, the black was starting to fleck gold. "Dammit! Nanoha, if we don't stop her soon, I'll have to kill her." Letting this much Chaos magic run free was just too much. Nanoha didn't like it, but she nodded. "We'll have to try harder..." "Excellion Lightning Buster." Nanoha pointed Raising Heart at one of the tentacle clones, the powerful lightning strike blowing through it and taking out the other two clones. "You cannot win." The clones said at once as the skies darkened and the winds picked up. "We'll see about that!" Lina yelled, though, she was worried about what was going on. (---) Fate blinked as she sat up in the large bed. "What..?" "Wake up, you three." She heard a voice that she hadn't heard in a long time. Her eyes wide, she turned to the door as Linith walked through the door and opened the shades, letting in light. "It's a beautiful day outside, come on, your mother is waiting on you three before we have breakfast together." "Mother..?" Fate said softly, her mind and body felt rather stunned. The last time she had seen her mother, she was rejected by Precia. How could Precia want to see her at all? (---) "Just rest, master." She heard that girl speak again. "Soon, it will all be over." "No." Hayate frowned as she sat up. "I won't. Where are my Knights?" "Dying." The woman said softly, her face showing regret. "They have been for awhile now." "What?" Hayate was stunned as she heard that. The other woman sighed softly and knelt down. "They absorbed a large amount of Chaotic magic... It turned them into humans, but the process was incomplete and their bodies were slowly breaking down in the process." "Why?" Hayate felt tears falling down her face hearing that. "It is my fault." She admitted, looking down. "They were in so much pain that I absorbed most of the energy that was surrounding them to keep them from hurting anymore. I was planning on finishing the process once I completed, but I was stopped..." For the first time, Hayate noticed that the black sludge was moving on its own. "A powerful dark energy stopped me from doing anything, and has strengthened the Protection Program's control over me." "Can anything be done?" The woman shook her head. "No. I am nothing more than a corrupted book... As things stand, I cannot do anything." "No!" Hayate frowned and cupped the woman's face. "You aren't just a book..." (---) As she sat under the tree, Fate looked around. The sky was unusually dark, but she couldn't see why, the sun was still shining after all. "Fate..." Alicia spoke up suddenly and Fate turned to the smaller girl. "You need to go." "What?" Fate thought that she needed to go as well, but she was sure that Alicia would fight her. Alicia smiled softly, tears welling up in her eyes. "You have friends who love you back there. And the black... It's not supposed to be here." She handed Fate a golden triangle pendant. "I love you, my sister." Fate smiled and hugged Alicia. "I'll never forget you, Alicia. I love you too, little sister." (---) "Nemesis Breaker!" Lina yelled, as her daughter was behind her, bracing her, the two skidded back several feet, but several more clones were destroyed in the process. "Dammit!" "Shadow destruction." Their opponent said softly, causing Lina to cast a lighting spell, shrinking their shadows as explosions nearly engulfed the two of them. Lina grimaced and coughed softly, her back was torn up and she was bleeding pretty badly from fighting this thing. "I just need to get close to the real one." (---) "But, I am nothing more than a book, a tome that brings nothing but destruction and death." Hayate shook her head. "You aren't... You aren't just a tome of death and destruction." She smiled at the woman. "You're someone who brings support to those around her." The woman's eyes were shining with unshed tears as Hayate continued to speak. "You'll no longer be known as a cursed tome. You're the Sacred Wind of Blessing..." The woman had tears falling from her eyes as Hayate continued to speak. "Welcome to my family, Reinforce." (---) "What's going on?" Nanoha asked as all the clones stopped moving. "Never mind, destroy the clones, we need to get to the original one!" Lina yelled as she fired several Val Flares, destroying the still clones while Nanoha blasted others. They would find out soon enough. (---) Fate gasped as she saw the black stuff start to form a solid wall. "What..?" She never had to question it as a powerful lightning bolt crashed into it. Turning, she saw her mother holding her staff and charging up another spell. "Fate, hurry! I can't hold it off for long!" "M...Mother?" Fate gasped, tears filling her eyes. "What?" Precia smiled at her. "I'm sorry, Fate, for what I did to you in life. I never told you, but I did love you. I was just too stubborn to see it." "Mother..." Fate smiled, tears falling freely. "Thank you, mother." "Sir?" "Bardiche, Zambar Form. Can you do it?" "Yes, sir." "You're a good boy." Fate smiled as Bardiche shifted into a large bladed sword. (---) "My knights... Can we help them?" Hayate asked Reinforce as she hugged the book. "Not as I am. I do not have the strength to do it." "You aren't alone, Reinforce." Hayate smiled as she hugged the book tighter, feeling Reinforce more with each moment. "With my help, we might be able to do it." "To turn them fully human, and give them the strength to fight back, it would require too much power." "How about that black stuff? Can we use the power it has?" "It's too dark." Hayate shook her head. "Just the power. If we could just send the raw power to the Knights, we could finish what was started." "I'm not sure." "Let's try!" Hayate yelled suddenly and closed her eyes. "Please work... Whatever can be done... Protect my Knights and deliver them back to me at full health." 'So, your conviction is this strong.' A strange voice spoke up, though neither Hayate nor Reinforce heard it. (---) Fate grimaced as the black sludge started to pool around her. "No! I have to go back!" Her eyes widened as a golden glow appeared and a shovel smashed into the gunk, turning it into motes of light, before dissolving into pure energy. In front of her was a woman with long blond hair, who grabbed the shovel and smiled at her. "Who?" The woman smiled and snapped her fingers, the dimensions breaking. "You should not tarry long. You have friends who miss you." (---) Just as they finished off the last of the clones, Nanoha and Lina blinked as the real one was engulfed in a white light, which shot off in the direction of the city, well, most of it, there was still a white light that remained, but it was much dimmer than before. "What's going on?" Nanoha asked in confusion, before seeing something to the side. "Fate-chan!" The blond turned to her and smiled. "I'm alright." "I'm glad!" Nanoha smiled brightly. (---) Yuuno gasped as he was bathed in a light. "What?" "These four... I see why their master loves them so." Yuuno turned and gasped as he saw a woman with long golden hair and a shovel looked at the downed Wolkenritter, before pointing an open palm at them. "Who... Who are you?" "I am am nothing but an echo." The woman turned to him, but Yuuno could see that she was fading. Before Yuuno could say anything, the woman disappeared, and the Wolkenritter woke up, before the scenery changed and the five found themselves floating over the ocean. "Hayate!" The Wolkenritter gasped as they saw the glow that was near them. It faded, showing a girl in a a short skirt, golden wings, a hat and a long coat. Her eyes were bright blue and her hair was white. "It's okay." Hayate smiled as she floated towards them, hugging them all. "Reinforce told me everything. I'm... Just so glad that we're all okay now." Lina grimaced as she saw the happy reunion. No, she wasn't upset about that, what she was upset about was having her body rather bloodied from that battle. "Finally made your appearance, kid?" She turned to Chrono, who was looking at her, rather shocked at her appearance. "Yeah... Look, get me back to the ship, I'm tired magically and my body's about to give out from all the blood that I've lost." Chrono nodded at her. "Alright." Lina smiled softly as she felt her body disappearing before reappearing on the ship. "Oh, doctor." (---) "Dammit! How the hell?!" She yelled as she saw them all recovering while a ball of sediment formed in the ocean. "How did she do that?!" "It doesn't matter." Her master chuckled at her. "Even if they win, we have a trump card in store." She grimaced at the thought, but nodded. "Alright." She wanted them to die NOW, dammit! Oh well, she'd have to settle for later then. Her master was right about one thing though. It never hurt to have back-up plans. Death Bringer chuckled. "I know what you want, don't worry. It's just not time yet." (---) Lina rolled her shoulder. "I really need to teach these people some better spells." At least her back wasn't bleeding freely anymore and as soon as this was over, she could have Shiro give her some serious pampering. As she walked by a door, she looked inside and frowned. "Well, well, you two..." She saw an older man with them and two guards outside. She took a step forward, but the guards stopped her. "I'm sorry, ma'am, we cannot let you in there." Lina sighed and put her hand on his shoulder. "If you're worried I'll commit murder... I might just do that, on the fool who decided to stop me from what I'm going to do." "But, I was told not to let anyone in here." He looked nervously at her. "I remember you..." Lina smiled at him. "You're the one who tried to keep me from talking to Fate." She put a hand on his shoulder. "Well, you do a good job." She chuckled as he fell down, asleep, before looking at the other one, who was looking away. "Good boy." Graham blinked as that redheaded woman walked into the room, looking at his familiars, who were gulping in sheer fright. "Excuse me?" He yelped as she grabbed his collar and pulled him close to her. "What?" "Get out." Lina shoved him away and walked slowly, deliberately towards the catgirls. "Father!" Aria yelped as Lina stopped just in front of us. "She's going to kill us!" "Oh, no... No, no, no..." Lina grinned at them. "If I killed you, you wouldn't learn anything." She snapped her head towards Graham. "Get out, or you'll share in their punishment." "Father!" Aria whimpered. "Go, we don't want you hurt." "That's a good girl." Lina grinned as Graham walked out. "Don't worry about them... This is only going to hurt... Tremendously." She turned and yelled at the guard outside of the door. "Close the door, we don't need people hearing this." She smiled as the door was closed. Turning towards the catgirl twins, she snapped her hand out. "Balas Rod." A whip appeared in her hand. "Man, if Naga ever heard what I'm going to do now, she'd freak." "Do what?" Lotte asked, whimpering as Lina snapped the whip a few times. "OHOHOHOHOHOHOHOHOHOHOHOHO!" __________________ My fics Due to certain things, I am not here, find me over on TFF.

2010-11-09, 13:27	Link #27798
Nanya01 Left for TFF Author Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: Frozen Hell of the North Age: 41	Here's part 13 Season 1 A's Part 1-10 A's Part 11 A's Part 12 Spoiler for Blood That Flows - A's Part 13: Hayate looked down as the sediment started to settle. "The program that caused Reinforce to be called a cursed tome... The Darkness... Of the Book of Darkness." As the creature appeared, several tentacles broke out of the surface of the water. "Fire BALL!" Yuuno yelled, several spheres lashing out from his fingertips, exploding and destroying the tentacles. "You better be able to keep up with me, you Devil." Vita smirked over her shoulder. "You too!" Nanoha smirked at her. "Iron Hammer Knight Vita!" She hefted the hammer on her shoulder. "And Graf Eisen, the Black Iron Count!" "Gigant Form!" Vita swung it around as the hammer shifted to a larger form, one that had Yuuno gulping slightly. "Rolling Hammer Slam..." She swung up as the hammer got MUCH larger in size. "Giganto... STRIIIKE!" The hammer slammed down on the first of four barriers, crushing it under the pressure. The creature under the barriers seemed to not be worried as several magic circles appeared around it. "Be careful everyone! It's preparing something." Amy's voice was heard. "Let's go! Nanoha Takamachi and Raising Heart Excellion!" "Load Cartridge." Nanoha smiled and spun her device a few times before pointing it at the protection program. "Excellion... BUSTER!" Even as its second barrier was pierced, more runes appeared around the creature. (---) "What's going on?" She asked, her blue hair blowing in the wind. Death Bringer chuckled. "Seems that a little gift I left it will be activating soon." When his Priest looked at him in confusion, he shook his head. "You'll see. By the way, why haven't you turned your hair and eys back to normal yet?" She chuckled at that. "I want it to be a surprise for them. If they survive this, well... I'm sure that she'll just love knowing who I am." (---) "Jet Zamber." Bardiche said as Fate slashed down, piercing the last barrier. Moments before the sword could strike, several black, red and green beams shot up from the creature, causing everyone to either dodge or block the attacks. "What the hell?!" Vita yelled, yelping as she nearly lost her face from an attack. "Looks like that's what it was planning." Amy's voice was hear. "The barriers are down, but it's firing spells at random, I can't figure out what's going on." Nanoha grimaced, this wasn't good. "Give me some defense!" Hayate yelled as a Belkan triangle appeared under her feet and several circles appeared in front of her as she began to chant. Zafira and Shamal nodded as they were the closest, due to their mad dashing to avoid the beams of death from the creature. As the beams got close, the two tossed up some of the strongest barriers that they could, keeping the attacks from harming their mistress. "Hræsvelgr!" Hayate called out, powerful white beams crashing through the attacks, exploding and causing them to halt for a moment. The creature looked up, narrowing its eyes at the golden-winged girl. As the skies became filled with magic runes, people started looking around nervously, this wasn't going to be good. (---) "What is this?" She asked and he chuckled at her. "A spell that calls on me." "Oooh!" Her eyes widened in glee. (---) *"Death's Harvester!"* Black funnels appeared, moving like tornadoes as they tore through any barriers, armor, barrier jackets and spells, leaving everyone who was near it in tattered clothes and dripping blood. "ENOUGH!" Nanoha yelled as the gems on her body started to glow. "Lord of Darkness of the Four Worlds! Grant me all the power you possess!" (---) "Magic amplification?!" Death Bringer just chuckled. "This is getting interesting now." (---) A bus-sized pink ball appeared in front of her. "Excellion... BUSTER!" Nanoha screamed as she fired the attack. "AAAAHHHH!" She felt herself being pushed back by the tremendous force from her own attack spell. She blinked as she felt hands on her back. Turning, she saw Fate and Yuuno there, holding her in place. "Yuuno-kun, Fate-chan." They smiled at her. "We're here for you, Nanoha." Fate spoke to her. "No matter where you go, we'll be there, walking with you each step of the way." Yuuno continued as they gripped Raising Heart. "So..." "Let's finish what we came here to do." Fate finished and the three looked down at the creature as they bombarded it with magical power. (---) "That's impressive." She nodded, shuddering at the Holy energy she could feel, even from this far away. "Don't worry about it..." Death Bringer smirked, even as the creature started to regenerate, but was stopped by a combination of freezing and stoning, before it broke off and started to regenerate again. (---) "Hayate-chan! Fate-chan!" Nanoha looked at the girls as they floated to her side. "Let's end this!" "Starlight Breaker. Ex Mode." Nanoha's gems glowed as she chanted the Amplification spell again as Raising Heart chewed through what remaining cartridges she had left. Behind her, Yuuno was ready to grab her. "STARRRLIIIGHT!" "Rend lightning!" Fate held Bardiche Zambar high. "Plasma Zambar!!" Hayate frowned at the thing. "For everyone you hurt... For making Reinforce think she was useless... Goodnight." She closed her eyes for a moment. "ECHO! Whistle of lasting closure! RAGNAROCK!" "BREAKER!!" The three yelled as they fired pink, yellow and white beams of total destruction down at the creature (---) "WHAT THE HELL IS THAT?!" She gasped, her eyes wide. "That... That power's insane!" Death Bringer shook his head. He admitted, his Priest would most likely be taken out by such an attack, but that still wouldn't. "Interesting spell. A mix of Black, Shamanistic and Holy magic effects, huh?" That was interesting, very interesting. "Change of plans, we're going to make things more interesting now." He chuckled as she looked at him in confusion. "We now have two targets." (---) "Nanoha!" Yuuno grabbed the girl as her hair turned white and she passed out. "Got you." Raising Heart shifted to gem form and he grabbed that, putting it in his pocket. "Silly girl." "I have it." Shamal said. "Need a little help." "Sorry!" Yuuno held a hand out. "Distance transmission!" "Target, in orbit." Shamal said softly. "TRANSMISSION!" The two yelled at the same time as they teleported the core straight into space. (---) "So they won." Death Bringer looked up as the ship in space fired a powerful attack, that destroyed the creature's body. "Heh, too bad that it won't matter. Come on, we'll see what they're going to do, then make our move." She nodded as the two of them disappeared. (---) Lina smiled as she walked out of the room. "You're still here?" She looked at Graham, who nodded. "Good..." Graham found himself on the floor from a punch that Lina connected to his jaw. "You're an IDIOT! You know that?! If someone has something THAT dangerous, you don't try to do something that will likely backfire! You do what you can to HELP them!" Lina snarled at him. "Besides, if you KNEW who had the book, didn't you think that maybe, just MAYBE I might have a way to deal with it?" "I didn't know you existed..." Graham muttered as he stood up. "What did you do to my familiars?" Lina chuckled and started walking away. "Go in and find out for yourself." Graham blinked and did just that. He gaped as he saw his familiars, bare-ass naked, laying face-down on the floor with whip marks on their backs, legs and arms, but that wasn't nearly as telling as how red their asses were. "Um..." "Father..." Lotte looked up, tears falling down her face. "I can't feel my butt anymore." "Hurts too much." Aria whimpered and twitched. "Hurts so much." Graham shuddered, he wasn't sure if he wanted to go through this himself. (---) "What did you do to them?" Lindy asked as Lina came into the control room. Lina chuckled. "Did what their father should have done. Gave them a spanking that they wouldn't forget." Lindy laughed softly. "Ah yes, as mothers, we need to do that sometimes." Lina nodded at that. "Yeah." She looked at the scene where everyone was floating over the destroyed body. "So, what's going to happen to them?" "We'll see, right now, they all need to recover." Lina nodded, that made sense. She sighed as she saw Nanoha's hair color. "She over-did it..." Oh well, it wasn't the first time someone in her family had done that. "This happen a lot?" "Only when you burn up all your magic at once." Lina nodded to Lindy. "She'll be fine in a couple of hours." "Okay." Lindy nodded at her. __________________ My fics Due to certain things, I am not here, find me over on TFF.

2010-11-09, 14:14

Link #27799

shiroi mahotsukai

Under Death by College

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Join Date: May 2010

Location: Where you least expect me

Age: 30

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Originally Posted by Nanya01

Here's part 12.

Sorry if it disappoints any of you.

Season 1

A's Part 1-10

A's Part 11

Spoiler for Blood That Flows - A's Part 12:

Quote:

Originally Posted by Nanya01

Here's part 13

Season 1

A's Part 1-10

A's Part 11

A's Part 12

Spoiler for Blood That Flows - A's Part 13:

I can't say it was dissapointing. It kept the final assault and that stopped it being anti-climactic which is the most important part.

Also owwww, that was a spanking for the ages.

The fact that they beat the book of darkness and it still didn't upset Death-Bringer has me intrigued, just how powerful is this guy seriously?

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"When desperate there are two choices: Lock shields for the last stand or draw your sword for the final charge"
"There are no winners or losers, there are only the living and the dead."

2010-11-09, 14:16	Link #27800
Rising Dragon Goat Herder Author Join Date: Jun 2008 Age: 36	... I'll never be able to catch up on this at this rate. __________________

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