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wavehawk · 2011-11-05, 05:26

@Jak how many bloody times have I posted somethign and not gotten feedback for anything?

Every fanfic writer has generally the same problem. They want people to read their fics but don't really want to read someone else's fic. Join the club.

And I'm not sure if you noticed, bnut I'm really startign to lose my temper with some of you guys.

agetreme · 2011-11-05, 05:28

Current result of my little poll is: people want female IS pilot as main character yet, they don't want to write one.....-_-

StratoSpear · 2011-11-05, 05:29

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Originally Posted by agetreme

Current result of my little poll is: people want female IS pilot as main character yet, they don't want to write one.....-_-

I would if I had thought of it sooner

Owait... Idea!

wavehawk · 2011-11-05, 05:30

It's a fanfic. Write what you want. If you write something based on what other people want, you're giving them the right to write your fanfic for you. Therefore it's not your fanfic anymore. Take input from other people, but write it the way you feel it should be written.

I already made this fracking mistake years ago with a Gundam Wing fanfic--it was the biggest disaster of my life because everyone kept telling me how to write it, and when I finally wrote it, they panned it as a piece of crap.

Why? Because I took on board all of their suggeestions and it turned otu just that: a piece of smelly stinkign crap that I refuse to even acknowledge. And apparently it's my fault, because I took on bpoard everythign eveyrone wanted to see in a fanfic.

TAKE MY ADVICE: WRITE YOUR FIC AS YOUR OWN.

Eratas123 · 2011-11-05, 05:34

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Originally Posted by agetreme

IT MIGHT EVEN BE BOTH!!!

IS is meant to be used by three people only but a glitch make it such that only only female can pilot IS

Note the ratio of Female to male in the three people:

2 to 1

*Tries to use Magatama instead*

It's just a glitch, nothing more.

*Black unbreakable Psyche locks appear*

TABANE~!

@ Hawke - Do you mean they blamed you with how the fic turned out even though they asked for those things to be put in?

wavehawk · 2011-11-05, 05:38

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Originally Posted by Eratas123

@ Hawke - Do you mean they blamed you with how the fic turned out even though they asked for those things to be put in?

- What part of the obvious was not clear?

It's the reason I stopped writing fanfiction and creative writing in general for a long time. Kind of like how you get someone like Michael Crichton and then tell him to write a story your way, and then get pissed off that it doesn't turn out like how Michael Crichton writes. It's frackign stupid but I get it all the time.

agetreme · 2011-11-05, 05:40

I am not just writing what people want, I had a plot and things going, the only problem is:

I am still trying to choose a main character for my story. (Still can't decide on that but wasted too much time trying to decide, How long? "Try ever since the beginning of this thread.")

Edit: That is the only suggestion I need, it is a spark to start the forest fire.

HasuMasu · 2011-11-05, 05:40

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Originally Posted by agetreme

Current result of my little poll is: people want female IS pilot as main character yet, they don't want to write one.....-_-

That's true, because it's difficult unless you're a girl.

Oh, and hinay-hinay lang Mike, baka atakihin ka sa puso.

Eratas123 · 2011-11-05, 05:43

@ Hawke - Calm down. It's all in the past right?

@ Treme - Just pick one that's the easiest for you to write amd use him/her.

ZeroXSEED · 2011-11-05, 05:48

I'm suddenly felt like an ass now...

Eratas123 · 2011-11-05, 05:49

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Originally Posted by ZeroXSEED

I'm suddenly felt like an ass now...

Why? You didn't do anything.

ZeroXSEED · 2011-11-05, 05:50

I dunno, I seems like had a talent of make people pissed off even though it's not my intention....

Especially my ignorance of situation.

HasuMasu · 2011-11-05, 05:55

This thread has its fair share of drama.

ZeroXSEED · 2011-11-05, 05:57

Well, we're humans, not robot after all. We have emotions and I just have to push wrong button because of my stupidity...

Eratas123 · 2011-11-05, 06:02

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Originally Posted by ZeroXSEED

Well, we're humans, not robot after all. We have emotions and I just have to push wrong button because of my stupidity...

I've never seen you piss anybody off, you're one of the few people here who tries to help everybody else here honestly.

ZeroXSEED · 2011-11-05, 06:06

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Originally Posted by Eratas123

I've never seen you piss anybody off, you're one of the few people here who tries to help everybody else here honestly.

Remember again how Jak literally goes berserk out of my Ignorance? Or SaintX for that matter.

Sometimes I just ignore others (remind me again how many times I tend to miss various post, and how I forgot about Box).

But screw that, angst around isn't this thread's style.

I have this problem regarding the pacing of new chapter currently, can I ask for help?

Eratas123 · 2011-11-05, 06:09

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Originally Posted by ZeroXSEED

Remember again how Jak literally goes berserk out of my Ignorance? Or SaintX for that matter.

Sometimes I just ignore others (remind me again how many times I tend to miss various post, and how I forgot about Box).

But screw that, angst around isn't this thread's style.

I have this problem regarding the pacing of new chapter currently, can I ask for help?

Of course! Let's get out of the angst train. What do you need help with?

ZeroXSEED · 2011-11-05, 06:15

New draft for chapter 12

Spoiler for LOL:

This, precisely.

The scene of interaction between Madoka and Dan is definitely unnatural, and for Madoka to suddenly talking about videogame is weird...and finally, the gratuitous fever...

I'm caught a writers block here....

Eratas123 · 2011-11-05, 06:24

@ Zero - I see no problem about Madoka talking about video games but please make the fever more gradual. Start with the two of them talking but her breath starts to become ragged and her face starts flushing the longer they talk. After that have her ask to share the bed which promts Ichika to ask her if she has a fever in which case she either collapses or he takes care of her.

For the video game just have Ichika and Dan talking about video games and she casually mentions the VI simultator since she wanted to join in the conversation.

Just my two cents.

ZeroXSEED · 2011-11-05, 06:39

Woah thanks, now I get some clue how to fix it...

2011-11-05, 05:26	Link #6261
wavehawk Some say I'm the Reverse Join Date: Jul 2006	@Jak how many bloody times have I posted somethign and not gotten feedback for anything? Every fanfic writer has generally the same problem. They want people to read their fics but don't really want to read someone else's fic. Join the club. And I'm not sure if you noticed, bnut I'm really startign to lose my temper with some of you guys. __________________ "We haven't been properly introduced..."

2011-11-05, 05:28	Link #6262
agetreme Just another Idiot Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Delusion world	Current result of my little poll is: people want female IS pilot as main character yet, they don't want to write one.....-_- __________________ Ara Han

2011-11-05, 05:30	Link #6264
wavehawk Some say I'm the Reverse Join Date: Jul 2006	It's a fanfic. Write what you want. If you write something based on what other people want, you're giving them the right to write your fanfic for you. Therefore it's not your fanfic anymore. Take input from other people, but write it the way you feel it should be written. I already made this fracking mistake years ago with a Gundam Wing fanfic--it was the biggest disaster of my life because everyone kept telling me how to write it, and when I finally wrote it, they panned it as a piece of crap. Why? Because I took on board all of their suggeestions and it turned otu just that: a piece of smelly stinkign crap that I refuse to even acknowledge. And apparently it's my fault, because I took on bpoard everythign eveyrone wanted to see in a fanfic. TAKE MY ADVICE: WRITE YOUR FIC AS YOUR OWN. __________________ "We haven't been properly introduced..."

2011-11-05, 05:40	Link #6267
agetreme Just another Idiot Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Delusion world	I am not just writing what people want, I had a plot and things going, the only problem is: I am still trying to choose a main character for my story. (Still can't decide on that but wasted too much time trying to decide, How long? "Try ever since the beginning of this thread.") Edit: That is the only suggestion I need, it is a spark to start the forest fire. __________________ Ara Han

2011-11-05, 05:43	Link #6269
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	@ Hawke - Calm down. It's all in the past right? @ Treme - Just pick one that's the easiest for you to write amd use him/her. __________________

2011-11-05, 05:48	Link #6270
ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	I'm suddenly felt like an ass now... __________________

2011-11-05, 05:50	Link #6272
ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	I dunno, I seems like had a talent of make people pissed off even though it's not my intention.... Especially my ignorance of situation. __________________

2011-11-05, 05:55	Link #6273
HasuMasu Senior Member Artist Join Date: Apr 2011 Location: The Middle Way	This thread has its fair share of drama. __________________

2011-11-05, 05:57	Link #6274
ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	Well, we're humans, not robot after all. We have emotions and I just have to push wrong button because of my stupidity... __________________

2011-11-05, 06:15	Link #6278
ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	New draft for chapter 12 Spoiler for LOL: ________________________________________ V2 Chapter 4: Bloodstained Silver Throne ________________________________________ ~ICHIKA POV~ “Well, that concludes today” “Too bad, I really want to met Madoka-chan” “I’m not letting you meet her” Contrary to what I said, it’s not like I’m not letting her getting him as boyfriend, problem is, I’m afraid once they broke up, it’ll never been the same again. Call me paranoid, if you want. “You went to mixed gender school right, how exactly you don’t get any girlfriend?” I hate to admit it, but during our Junior High Dan is kind of popular guy. Too bad at the time our minds we’re occupied by something else, and now Dan regret it. “Dunno, it’s maybe nice guy syndrome or something, except for the fact that you’re immune to it…grr…” Well, while Dan is ‘nice’, some button simply shouldn’t be pushed. “Ichika-nii?” “WOAH!” It was Madoka, standing behind us all along, and of course it startled Dan, poor him. “Madoka? Why are you here?” “Took some fresh air, it was boring in the home without you, and I’m hungry, besides, you forget to bring your cellphone” Alas, I left it in my dorm…maybe I should bring her after all…”Ahh, I’m very sorry” “No problem, I suppose you’re Dan-san?” “Yep, that’s me” pointed himself confidently, Dan raised his chest a little… that’s pathetic… “My Name is Madoka, nice to meet you!” It was rare for Madoka to smile to a new acquaintance, maybe the effect of having real friends? Or maybe because Madoka knew Dan from my story and that two of us hits well? Anyway, it’s good. “Ah, it’s dark already, would you like to have a dinner with us?” I offered him, honestly, what else could I do? Smiled at me with suspicious eyes, Dan waved his hand “Nope, I’m not gonna disturb your private moment” Madoka seems disturbed with that, and her face is flushed with red, hey! Don’t tell me you flirt with him all along… “N-no, it’s not like that, I’ll be happy if you can join us” “I’m not very convinced” “Well if you said so” Madoka laughed, seems like she’s not hitting him at all, thank God, but I wonder why she seems embarrassed “Anyway, you know that tomorrow a closed beta testing of ‘ISVR’ system is held at Arcade nearby?” “Yeah, I knew it; it was called Closed Beta for something though, the participant is specially selected from those who win the higher place national ISVS tournament 3 years ago” “How do you know about that?” I raised my eyebrow “Hey you haven’t told me” “Ah, sorry, my bad” One of Dan’s bad side is that he tends not to tell something trivial to him, but sometimes it’s crucial for somebody else, geez… “Iori-san told us to participate in its testing; they want an opinion from real pilots” “Hmm I see” I should bring my cellphone… “And to bring at least one friend along, preferably male” I and Madoka looked at Dan, who seems puzzled “me?” He asked. We nodded in conclusion. “That… would be awesome…” Being a game mania he is, Dan must be caught off guard, a chance of lifetime testing a new Reality simulation, no wonder he lose the ability to speech coherently… even though usually he’s very talkative. “Please come at 07:00 O’clock” “Are you sure it’s okay to bring him?” I asked jokingly. “Well, dunno, that’s up to Iori-san” Madoka shrugged. “You guys better not give me false hope” Dan seems annoyed as he turned his back on us ”See you tom, and call me if there’s a change of plan” “Yup” As his tall and lanky figure disappeared within the dim-lit alleys, I mumbled “I wonder what I should cook today?” “I want omu-rice!” Madoka frowned and tugging my sleeves like a child begging for candies, normally I’ll shake my head to high-protein dinner, but since its Madoka, and the fact that I abandoned herfor three hours odd, I’ll leave it this once. The dinner went absolutely smooth, and Madoka complimented my cooking as always, even though it’s nothing special, well, at least it’s up to her expectation. And then things went downhill… “Madoka” “NO” “Please?” “I said no” “We’re not going to share a bed, too small” “Precisely” Did Madoka have a fever or something? Well, as I checked, SHE DID, OH GOD! Using my strength, I carried her to the upper room, and most of my goods are there. POOOOF “Uwa…” “Open your mouth” “Ichika-nii-“ “Open. Your. Mouth” I crossed my arms and emulating Chifuyu-nee’s stern face, which made Madoka obedient somehow. 37.8 C, slight fever, there’s not much symptom beyond that, no sneeze or cough, strange. It’s not influenza probably, so I might just give her fever medicine and use warm compress. I see if her condition will be better or worse… On aside note, cold compress is no longer an effective method to reduce fever, because it caused constriction of the veins. Warm compress enlarged them hence the body can regulate the temperature more efficiently by the means of blood flows and sweat. “Gee, I wonder if it’s because the cold room and late dinner…” “You won’t leave me right” “Nope, I won’t” I don’t know why, but by consciences whisper that I won’t leave Madoka for a long time. Probably the best. “So this is their place?” “Yep, this is” It was me in the past, me and Dan precisely… Its winter 2014, and snowy, everyone is walking around, paid no attention to two of us. Except for them. Five guys, three armed, one with a knife. “Finally you came…you bastard” “You dare to challenge us?!” “Why? You guys are just cheapskate pussies, two of us are enough” Dan mockingly asked. “SHUT UP AND DIE!” “I should be the one told you that, asshole!” Dan opening the slaughter with a kick to the face, yep, his long legs aren’t for show… “Why don’t you guys just apologize and gone with it” I laughed manically as my first strike broke my target’s teeth, my fist is bleached with the blood of my enemy. Those feelings, sense of domination and bloodlust, somehow both familiar and alien at the same time. And then, that switchblade flew toward Dan… This, precisely. The scene of interaction between Madoka and Dan is definitely unnatural, and for Madoka to suddenly talking about videogame is weird...and finally, the gratuitous fever... I'm caught a writers block here.... __________________

2011-11-05, 06:24	Link #6279
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	@ Zero - I see no problem about Madoka talking about video games but please make the fever more gradual. Start with the two of them talking but her breath starts to become ragged and her face starts flushing the longer they talk. After that have her ask to share the bed which promts Ichika to ask her if she has a fever in which case she either collapses or he takes care of her. For the video game just have Ichika and Dan talking about video games and she casually mentions the VI simultator since she wanted to join in the conversation. Just my two cents. __________________

2011-11-05, 06:39	Link #6280
ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	Woah thanks, now I get some clue how to fix it... __________________