I think it's a bit wordy but it gets the job done. I cheat with Franz because his barrier jacket works off an existing form of clothing.
Spoiler for my take:
Franz jumps from the helo, falling towards the ground: just like HALO but without the chute, he thinks. He thinks his command phrase, the mental instruction triggering his barrier jacket.
Light envelops him briefly; in a flash his uniform is gone, replaced with olive drab fatigues and a black body armor vest. Strapped to his thigh is his backup device - his sidearm, slung across his back is the bolt-action rifle that's his primary device. He hits the train in a roll, bleeding off momentum, rising to a crouch with his sidearm drawn. Gloved hands hold his weapon steady, as he presses his left hand to his ear in a habitual gesture.
"Uruz 6 has landed. Let's get the party rolling."
He does a sweep with his sidearm before transitioning to the rifle, as around him the Forwards and Uruz Team land. Ahead of them is their target: an abandoned building within the ruined city, suspected of holding smugglers (in reality holding selected members of Sword Flight who've been roped into this live-fire exercise.
Note the difference? Still, in the end, these things boil down to style.
All I can say is that to improve as a writer you need to read alot. Clancy, Weber, Ringo, classical authors, Griffin - these are good for building descriptiveness when discussing charecters.
Another approach is to describe the charecter (A) from another person's (B) perspective:
Spoiler for Other POV:
Franz kept a neutral look on his face as he observed training.
It was obvious that the two Captains had different approaches to their training attire. Nanoha wore her Class As, the white of her uniform jacket complimenting the blue, and shining brightly in the sun, reflecting light back at all who saw.
Fate wore the same PT clothing as her team: a black t-shirt, navy blue combat pants, combat boots and fingerless gloves. Despite the thinner and somewhat lighter clothing, she was sweating; though no sweat stains appeared on the black t-shirt, the way the fabric clung to the blonde's body was proof enough the heat was getting to her.
Still, perhaps Nanoha had a point, thought Franz. Afterall, white was a good color to wear under the sun, given that it reflected heat. His own clothing struck a compromise - gray t-shirt and a pair of olive drab combat pants. Like his boots, the trousers were faded and well-worn, the only links to his former occupation, back home.
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One must forgive one's enemies, but not before they are hanged.Heinrich Heine.
Never really could get into Clancy, and I haven't heard of the other authors, but I'll see what I can do. For most OC appearances I was already describing them from another person's POV, it's just for the first use of Roas' Barrier Jacket, there was no one else's perspective I could use. But I'll read around and see how I can improve on the description. Thanks for the advice! If anyone else has any advice to share, I'd love to hear it.
David Weber - Mil-SF author, best known for the Honor Harrington series. Tends to describe things in 2 ways: setting infodump, and a single concise description that's then occasionally reinforced.
John Ringo - Mil-SF author. Quite entertaining. The Prince Roger and Vorpal Blade series are excellent looks at small unit life and conversations. (The Paladin of Shadows series.... there's a reason Ringo called it his personal wank piece, never to see light of day. Jim Baen and the forumites at Baen's Bar overruled him.)
W.E.B. Griffin - author with several series: Brotherhood of War, The Corps, Men At War, Badge of Honor and most recently the Presidential Agent series. Is capable of summing up concisely what happened before so that no matter which book you start with, you have a working idea of what's going on.
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One must forgive one's enemies, but not before they are hanged.Heinrich Heine.
Kevin returned home one Sunday afternoon, sighing his usual sigh as he stepped through the
threshold of his house.
Sundays were nice days. Sundays meant shorter work day, less irritating customers, and less
clean-up time. Sundays also meant a visit from his daughters, whom were usually too busy at
work or with their own lives. It was a little sad, but they were adults now (though in his opinion,
19 was NOT adult age just yet), and they knew what they were doing (hopefully).
He was about two-sevenths of the way though a newspaper article about some special group
within the Bureau called NSIS when he heard the front door clatter open. Was someone visiting
him early today? He lowered his paper to see a girl around his shoulder’s height, black hair and
red eyes. Once upon a time, she was known as Material-A, an entity similar to Material-S,
Material-D, and Material-L. And just like the latter three, Material-A ended up being adopted
by a particular man…
“Hey, dad,” she smiled at him, setting her shoes aside by the entrance. “I’m home!”
Kevin blinked, “Athena. I didn’t expect you to come today.”
“I know, and I’m sorry I haven’t been around lately,” she seemed genuinely sad about that. It
had been… what, a month since she last visited? In comparison to the frequency in which her
sisters came over, Athena seemed like she was completely out of touch. She accepted her
father’s hug gratefully, giving him a big squeeze.
“Well, I’m glad you came to visit,” Kevin said as they parted. “Will you be staying for dinner?”
“Is that too much?” she actually looked worried.
“Of course not. Though, you’re a little early.”
“That’s no problem,” she shrugged. “I could get some extra work done while I wait. Besides,
it’s relaxing to be home for once. What are you making?”
“Since you’re here… why not chateaubriand?”
Athena blinked. Wasn’t that really expensive? She remembered the first time she offhandedly
asked for that, with Wagyu beef. Further research revealed that particular cut’s price range,
and she was absolutely mortified at the hit it would make on the family’s budget. Even with the
supplementing funds from the child care system, it was terribly debilitating. She changed her
mind quickly after that embarrassment.
The cook just chuckled at the girl’s expression, “I know. It’s a pricy cut, but I got some
tenderloin cheap this week. If not chateaubriand, how about steak au poivre?”
Athena make an approving sound, “Do that voodoo you do, then.”
“Of course. You want some coffee? Tea?”
“Tea would be wonderful, thank you,” Athena took a seat by the kitchen table, placing her
workbag by her feet. The wooden chair creaked comfortably to her weight.
A kettle of water was heating up beforehand, and just now reached the right temperature. In a
warmed iron teapot, Kevin spooned in a good amount of small, shiny black pellets before
pouring the hot water in.
“Yuuno was kind enough to bring a shipment of gunpowder green tea in with him – half for me,
half for Lindy. It’s not the expensive stuff, but it’s not junk either.”
“He’s a great man. Shana, Lilia, and Diana are all really lucky to have him.”
“I’m not all too keen on the ‘lets all share Yuuno’ plan, but if that’s how they want it…” Kevin
shrugged, pouring the prepared tea into two cups. “Whatever happens will be theirs to deal with.
I’ll just be there if they need me…”
“And that’s why they think you are the greatest dad in the world.”
“What about you?” Kevin smirked handed his adopted daughter a cup.
“Thank you,” she accepted it gratefully, breathing in its scent. “What about me?”
“Am I the greatest dad in the world?”
“Hmm,” the clone looked thoughtful for a moment before nodding at her mental conclusion.
“You were the best choice given the situation.”
“I can’t tell if that’s a good thing or bad thing.”
She chuckled, “I’m kidding. I know I don’t say this or show it too often, but I’m very grateful
that you took me in. The life I have now would not have been possible had you not accepted me.
So…”
“Hey, no need to get nostalgic here,” Kevin placed a hand on her head and ruffled her long hair,
much to her squawk of protest. “I was just kidding too. I don’t need reaffirmation to feel proud.
You all have already given me plenty to be proud about.”
Athena just blushed from the contact, a hand reaching up to idly brush back strands of ruffled
hair.
“Now then. I think I’ll get started on some side dishes and dessert. Lilia would kill me if we
didn’t have dessert…”
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Steak au poivre, or pepper steak, is a steak—traditionally a filet mignon—that is loosely coated
with cracked peppercorns. The steak is then seared on a high skillet to form a crust then cooked
to the desired doneness (medium rare for everyone, in this case. Today, the steak au poivre
would be served with a pan sauce of cognac, cream, butter, Dijon mustard, diced shallots, and
pan fond. Side dishes included roasted fingerling potatoes and grilled vegetables. For dessert…
hmm, raspberry sorbet sounded a good contrast to big meal like that. As Kevin went about
preparing and chopping the vegetables, Athena’s attention was on the number of documents and
photograph spread across the table.
At first, Kevin thought them to be mere profiles, possibly of known TSAB criminals, suspects,
or perhaps personnel reviews. In a moment of silence, however, he heard the girl mutter to
herself about certain things,
“Him… no, not high enough. Won’t get anywhere with him. Hyundai? Pretty good, but not
gonna let my surname be that.”
What the…
“Ooh, a general’s son. Ooh, a CEO. Oooh. This one IS a general…”
Ah. That’s what she’s doing.
“Athena.”
“Hmm?”
“Is something the matter? You’ve been rather closed up tonight.”
“It’s nothing for you to worry about,” the black-haired girl waved him off. “Just a little work,
that’s all.”
“Girl, I may not be blood-related, but I’ve been your father for these ten years. I know when
something is bothering you, especially if it’s about potential romance options.”
Inwardly, Athena cursed. She had almost forgotten how observant this man was. She had to
play it off somehow…
“Haha… ahh, you caught me,” she gave her father a half smile. “I guess I’ve been feeling a little
jealous of my sisters and friends. They’ve all got someone to hold on to, and I’m still by my
lonesome.”
Pff. She wasn’t getting off that easy, “Your criteria wouldn’t happen to include potential for
political advancement, would it?”
Hmm. She had underestimated him severely. Perhaps this was punishment for not staying in
touch.
“If there’s one thing that hasn’t changed about you, it’s your perchance to plan and plot for your
rapid climb through military and political ranks. You’ve gotten this far by skill and hard work
alone, and now you seek a shortcut through marriage.”
Athena let out a quiet sigh. Figures she couldn’t hide any of this from the man she called dad.
Smiling softly, she looked at Kevin, “You got it, even though I wasn’t trying very hard to hide it.”
“I’ve never asked much of you or your sisters. So long as you got good grades and did your
best effort, I was satisfied. I promised to let you all live the way you wanted, and I’ve done
that,” Kevin leaned up against the kitchen counter, vegetables still unfinished. “You’ve all
become beautiful, strong, and highly intelligent women. You could ask for the world, and they
would give it to you. That’s why I hope whichever you choose to spend the rest of your life with
is a decision you made with love, not greed.
“Please. Don’t marry someone because of position, power, or money. I know you want to
move up as quickly and as high as possible, but don’t sacrifice your heart for that. It’s not worth
it.”
Material-A, Athena, stared at the man before her. In some way, she regretted coming home, as
she would not have been questioned about her plans. Yet, in light of Kevin’s words, she felt
frustration, shame, and… relief? Her father did not approve of what she was doing, a rarity in of
itself. While his hands-off style of parenting allowed her unprecedented growth, when he did
speak up, it was always for a good reason. Ten minutes ago, Athena was completely into this
plan, to find a partner that could help her climb the political latter even faster. Now, she doubted
herself and everything she had done. And for some reason, she felt good about that.
Damn you, dad.
“…Okay. I’ll forget about all this,” was all she said.
“Thank you,” Kevin nodded and pushed off the counter.
“Chose with my heart, huh?” Athena said softly, looking over the piles of profiles and histories.
They were… unworthy. She looked back at her dad, “And what if I chose you?”
Kevin gave her a look, a short moment passing before he shook his head and went back to work.
Kevin returned home one Sunday afternoon, sighing his usual sigh as he stepped through the
threshold of his house.
Sundays were nice days. Sundays meant shorter work day, less irritating customers, and less
clean-up time. Sundays also meant a visit from his daughters, whom were usually too busy at
work or with their own lives. It was a little sad, but they were adults now (though in his opinion,
19 was NOT adult age just yet), and they knew what they were doing (hopefully).
He was about two-sevenths of the way though a newspaper article about some special group
within the Bureau called NSIS when he heard the front door clatter open. Was someone visiting
him early today? He lowered his paper to see a girl around his shoulder’s height, black hair and
red eyes. Once upon a time, she was known as Material-A, an entity similar to Material-S,
Material-D, and Material-L. And just like the latter three, Material-A ended up being adopted
by a particular man…
“Hey, dad,” she smiled at him, setting her shoes aside by the entrance. “I’m home!”
Kevin blinked, “Athena. I didn’t expect you to come today.”
“I know, and I’m sorry I haven’t been around lately,” she seemed genuinely sad about that. It
had been… what, a month since she last visited? In comparison to the frequency in which her
sisters came over, Athena seemed like she was completely out of touch. She accepted her
father’s hug gratefully, giving him a big squeeze.
“Well, I’m glad you came to visit,” Kevin said as they parted. “Will you be staying for dinner?”
“Is that too much?” she actually looked worried.
“Of course not. Though, you’re a little early.”
“That’s no problem,” she shrugged. “I could get some extra work done while I wait. Besides,
it’s relaxing to be home for once. What are you making?”
“Since you’re here… why not chateaubriand?”
Athena blinked. Wasn’t that really expensive? She remembered the first time she offhandedly
asked for that, with Wagyu beef. Further research revealed that particular cut’s price range,
and she was absolutely mortified at the hit it would make on the family’s budget. Even with the
supplementing funds from the child care system, it was terribly debilitating. She changed her
mind quickly after that embarrassment.
The cook just chuckled at the girl’s expression, “I know. It’s a pricy cut, but I got some
tenderloin cheap this week. If not chateaubriand, how about steak au poivre?”
Athena make an approving sound, “Do that voodoo you do, then.”
“Of course. You want some coffee? Tea?”
“Tea would be wonderful, thank you,” Athena took a seat by the kitchen table, placing her
workbag by her feet. The wooden chair creaked comfortably to her weight.
A kettle of water was heating up beforehand, and just now reached the right temperature. In a
warmed iron teapot, Kevin spooned in a good amount of small, shiny black pellets before
pouring the hot water in.
“Yuuno was kind enough to bring a shipment of gunpowder green tea in with him – half for me,
half for Lindy. It’s not the expensive stuff, but it’s not junk either.”
“He’s a great man. Shana, Lilia, and Diana are all really lucky to have him.”
“I’m not all too keen on the ‘lets all share Yuuno’ plan, but if that’s how they want it…” Kevin
shrugged, pouring the prepared tea into two cups. “Whatever happens will be theirs to deal with.
I’ll just be there if they need me…”
“And that’s why they think you are the greatest dad in the world.”
“What about you?” Kevin smirked handed his adopted daughter a cup.
“Thank you,” she accepted it gratefully, breathing in its scent. “What about me?”
“Am I the greatest dad in the world?”
“Hmm,” the clone looked thoughtful for a moment before nodding at her mental conclusion.
“You were the best choice given the situation.”
“I can’t tell if that’s a good thing or bad thing.”
She chuckled, “I’m kidding. I know I don’t say this or show it too often, but I’m very grateful
that you took me in. The life I have now would not have been possible had you not accepted me.
So…”
“Hey, no need to get nostalgic here,” Kevin placed a hand on her head and ruffled her long hair,
much to her squawk of protest. “I was just kidding too. I don’t need reaffirmation to feel proud.
You all have already given me plenty to be proud about.”
Athena just blushed from the contact, a hand reaching up to idly brush back strands of ruffled
hair.
“Now then. I think I’ll get started on some side dishes and dessert. Lilia would kill me if we
didn’t have dessert…”
--
Steak au poivre, or pepper steak, is a steak—traditionally a filet mignon—that is loosely coated
with cracked peppercorns. The steak is then seared on a high skillet to form a crust then cooked
to the desired doneness (medium rare for everyone, in this case. Today, the steak au poivre
would be served with a pan sauce of cognac, cream, butter, Dijon mustard, diced shallots, and
pan fond. Side dishes included roasted fingerling potatoes and grilled vegetables. For dessert…
hmm, raspberry sorbet sounded a good contrast to big meal like that. As Kevin went about
preparing and chopping the vegetables, Athena’s attention was on the number of documents and
photograph spread across the table.
At first, Kevin thought them to be mere profiles, possibly of known TSAB criminals, suspects,
or perhaps personnel reviews. In a moment of silence, however, he heard the girl mutter to
herself about certain things,
“Him… no, not high enough. Won’t get anywhere with him. Hyundai? Pretty good, but not
gonna let my surname be that.”
What the…
“Ooh, a general’s son. Ooh, a CEO. Oooh. This one IS a general…”
Ah. That’s what she’s doing.
“Athena.”
“Hmm?”
“Is something the matter? You’ve been rather closed up tonight.”
“It’s nothing for you to worry about,” the black-haired girl waved him off. “Just a little work,
that’s all.”
“Girl, I may not be blood-related, but I’ve been your father for these ten years. I know when
something is bothering you, especially if it’s about potential romance options.”
Inwardly, Athena cursed. She had almost forgotten how observant this man was. She had to
play it off somehow…
“Haha… ahh, you caught me,” she gave her father a half smile. “I guess I’ve been feeling a little
jealous of my sisters and friends. They’ve all got someone to hold on to, and I’m still by my
lonesome.”
Pff. She wasn’t getting off that easy, “Your criteria wouldn’t happen to include potential for
political advancement, would it?”
Hmm. She had underestimated him severely. Perhaps this was punishment for not staying in
touch.
“If there’s one thing that hasn’t changed about you, it’s your perchance to plan and plot for your
rapid climb through military and political ranks. You’ve gotten this far by skill and hard work
alone, and now you seek a shortcut through marriage.”
Athena let out a quiet sigh. Figures she couldn’t hide any of this from the man she called dad.
Smiling softly, she looked at Kevin, “You got it, even though I wasn’t trying very hard to hide it.”
“I’ve never asked much of you or your sisters. So long as you got good grades and did your
best effort, I was satisfied. I promised to let you all live the way you wanted, and I’ve done
that,” Kevin leaned up against the kitchen counter, vegetables still unfinished. “You’ve all
become beautiful, strong, and highly intelligent women. You could ask for the world, and they
would give it to you. That’s why I hope whichever you choose to spend the rest of your life with
is a decision you made with love, not greed.
“Please. Don’t marry someone because of position, power, or money. I know you want to
move up as quickly and as high as possible, but don’t sacrifice your heart for that. It’s not worth
it.”
Material-A, Athena, stared at the man before her. In some way, she regretted coming home, as
she would not have been questioned about her plans. Yet, in light of Kevin’s words, she felt
frustration, shame, and… relief? Her father did not approve of what she was doing, a rarity in of
itself. While his hands-off style of parenting allowed her unprecedented growth, when he did
speak up, it was always for a good reason. Ten minutes ago, Athena was completely into this
plan, to find a partner that could help her climb the political latter even faster. Now, she doubted
herself and everything she had done. And for some reason, she felt good about that.
Damn you, dad.
“…Okay. I’ll forget about all this,” was all she said.
“Thank you,” Kevin nodded and pushed off the counter.
“Chose with my heart, huh?” Athena said softly, looking over the piles of profiles and histories.
They were… unworthy. She looked back at her dad, “And what if I chose you?”
Kevin gave her a look, a short moment passing before he shook his head and went back to work.
“Don’t be ridiculous.”
I really like Kevin. He's a cook without special powers, but he manages to be an awesome character nonetheless.
Also, whoo-yeah, Material-A was used in a Side Dish! Let's celebrate with a sketch of the young Material-A:
...I'm displaying a tremendous lack of Side Dish knowledge, but who's Material-A? Last I knew, the LSD girls were adopted by Kevin...
...Keroko-copy, perhaps?
...seconding Nya~n's comments, especially in light of the unfortunate bit of news i've found that in Japan, side dish is also a slang term for an aid towards fapping or someone that a person faps to.
...in other words, Kevin is Athena's side dish...
*Goose is shot repeatedly*
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One must forgive one's enemies, but not before they are hanged.Heinrich Heine.
Yeah, the term in japanese is Okazu, is not flattering
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For those that belittle their favorite characters, complain about pairings, complain about oversexed images. Stop, thank you.
Fear Anxiety Doubt is but a fad. The life of a fad depends entirely on the willingness to support it. Difficulty is a choice. Determination is a path. Your next great idea after your destination is the true goal.
I have to add though, Tesla is the "in-between" in terms of spin. After she was created, much crack was used in her development. Like Griffith. Maybe she set the precedent, and every other OC after her were not just developed with crack, but born with crack.
Well then, here goes. Crosspost from the FFT--I'll post the intro to the chapter with it as well (it's the same as the teaser I posted some time back). I'll get the character profiles for the OCs up eventually, when I have a scanner that I can actually work with.
Spoiler for Chapter 1 Intro:
It had already been over a day since the fateful and brutal attack on Ailotana, and yet the sun still seemed to struggle to pierce through the ominous, black clouds that drifted overhead. And with evening fast approaching, it was like the sun had given up on this futile battle against the bleak weather, and as it set, the destroyed settlement was painted in orange that glowed against the black. Nearly all of the structures in the settlement were charred and blown apart in the attack, leaving them gutted and broken, with the streets full of debris—clean-up efforts had been hazardous so far. A wind cut through the site, but it offered no coolness or comfort to the beleaguered survivors or the relief crew from the Time-Space Administration Bureau. It was uncomfortably warm and humid, adding to the miserable atmosphere and the terrible conditions the survivors were facing.
Junior Enforcer Teana Lanster sighed and brushed a strand of reddish-orange hair from her face, doing her best to ignore the wind that was blowing through the ruins of Ailotana. Behind her, in the nearby valley, several tents had been erected to help care for the injured survivors that the rescue squad had been able to recover from the destroyed buildings. But for every survivor they had managed to find, there seemed to be three more body bags, which were all laid out a short distance from the tents.
But it was what lay before her that had caught her interest, in the plain that lay just before the entrance to Ailotana. Off in its center, surrounded by mages in protective clothing, stood a massive construct, nearly twice the size of a full-grown man. The sleek armor plating was easily seen from the distance, perhaps because of the eerie, foul glow of magical energy that, even now, still seemed to burn off of it like a funeral pyre. The amount of magic was so dense, and so dangerous, that nearing it without the protection of a barrier jacket and proper shielding spells would grant the unlucky ones something akin to radiation poisoning.
The same radiation poisoning that now afflicted nearly all of the survivors of Ailotana.
“Teana.”
The girl turned to see her superior officer walking up the hill to her. She nodded to Fate briefly as she crested the hill and stopped beside her, then turned her gaze back to the armor below.
“Have they discovered anything new?” the older woman asked, also looking down to where the mages worked on purging the harmful magic from the area.
“We’ve managed to identify the armor’s wearer,” Teana replied slowly, bringing up the file in a holographic window. “It’s him, Fate. I’m sorry.”
Fate’s expression seemed to fall slightly, disappointed at the knowledge. “I see. Any idea why he’d attack this place? I thought the two of them were friends, of a sort.”
“We’re still not sure,” Teana replied. “His Device wasn’t on his person, even though the armor seems to require one to operate. We think it was taken after his death.”
The other Enforcer nodded briefly. “Let me know if you discover anything else. Especially anything pertaining to—”
She was quickly interrupted by the yell of another one of the officers on site. “Ma’am, you’d better come and see this!”
Both women turned at the sound of the voice, which came from the direction of the medical campsite. “Stay here and keep an eye on the investigation, Teana,” Fate ordered softly.
The younger woman quickly nodded. “Yes ma’am.”
Fate proceeded back down the hill and joined the other TSAB official before they made their way towards the camp at a brisk pace. “We’ve managed to identify one of the survivors, ma’am,” the officer informed her as they approached. “He’s in recovery right now, but the medics say he’s able to talk now.”
“Understood,” Fate replied, nodding once. “Maybe now we can find out what happened here. Show me where he is.”
“Right away, ma’am.”
He took her to one of the smaller tents used for patients with more serious injuries, and reported to the guard stationed at its entrance, while Fate proceeded inside. Two medics were watching over a single elderly man resting in the wheeled bed in the center. I.V. lines had been administered to the back of his hands, and the skin around his balding head looked slightly mottled and unnaturally pale. His breath was coming in long rasps, though he didn’t seem to look like he was suffering from a breathing problem. His eyes, thankfully, were alert, and despite his fragile condition, he shifted to rise as he spotted Fate enter the tent.
“Please, rest,” she said to the man, one Emil Valare, motioning for him to lie back down. Valare considered it for a brief moment and acquiesced.
“I shouldn’t be surprised that you were the one who investigated this catastrophe, Ms. Harlaown,” he said amiably, settling back down. “Not with everything that’s happened lately.”
Fate nodded. “You witnessed the fight, didn’t you?” She asked, sitting at the corner of the bed. Valare nodded. “You know who’s responsible for this tragedy.”
“I do. It’s a shame, really,” Valare said wistfully, looking off to the side. “He showed such promise, only to come to an end like this. At the very least, those two managed to stop him.”
“We never really knew everything that happened since we met him,” Fate said quietly—they both knew it wasn’t the one in the armor that she spoke of. A nurse approached and began writing off a reading on the machine Valare was hooked up to. “He never told us, and she never broke his confidence, even during their time with us.”
“That doesn’t surprise me. He never was much for other people.”
“Perhaps you can tell us, then,” suggested the Enforcer. “We need to know, so we can figure out where to go from here. Everything, from the beginning.”
Emil glanced at the woman, only to see her patient face. Slowly, he nodded. “I suppose we owe you that much.
“Some time ago, Ailotana lost its greatest scientific mind. It was the death of a legend, and with it, a mass pilfering of his technology,” he started, clasping spindly fingers together as he recollected. “The man she saved was an unrivaled mercenary, and we paired him with an Intelligent Device that Research and Development had been using in their experiments. Our settlement fell into a sharp financial crisis after we lost our edge in the technology market. Relying on a mercenary was the inevitable resolution to keep food on the table.”
The man suddenly began coughing, and he brought a hand up to cover his mouth while the fit subsided. Fate looked concerned and made to rise, but he quickly waved at her to stay seated. After a moment, he was able to continue. “I used that man… and through him, her. I make no claim of righteousness. He was simply the only one who could have made it happen."
MAGICAL GIRL LYRICAL NANOHA:
THE COLLARED
CHAPTER ONE:
A Nonexistent Choice
Spoiler for Chapter 1 Scene 1:
It had been several months—close to half a year, really—since the death of Professor Avon Leganza, but Ailotana was still feeling the sting of his passing. The man, a scientist known for his prowess at developing and refining cutting-edge Device technology, was the greatest, but unfortunately the only asset the settlement had since the civil war had begun to die down and the Time-Space Administration Bureau reasserted itself on the newly-Administered world of Exavil. Since then, various companies and corporations had begun to move into the resource-rich planet, despite warnings and from the Bureau that hostilities on the planet had yet to come to a complete end.
The various towns and cities that had come out of the battles had to rely on these companies to rebuild their failing economies, but as such, there were still tensions in the air as those who were against the support of the TSAB waited to prey upon those that had. And Ailotana had just become one such viable target—with Leganza’s passing, a nightmare of paperwork and procedure had left most of his research and discoveries taken by the corporations that had once worked alongside the man, leaving the settlement with little else. Now, without the help of Leganza’s achievements in Device development, Ailotana looked to be on the verge of bankruptcy.
So what to do? That was the question that Emil Valare currently faced.
Valare had worked as both an assistant and an advisor to Avon Leganza, having extensive knowledge on Device creation and repair, but his true talents lay in politics, and he had aided Leganza in making the most favorable contracts with the growing corporations inhabiting Exavil, seeing what schemes might be in the making and guiding him and Ailotana out of harm’s way. Now, with Leganza dead, he was the most qualified person to get the settlement out of the mess it was in.
But how? he wondered. Due to the loophole in those first contracts, the corporations have left us with practically nothing to work with!
He shook his head in disgust for the way the companies worked. Before he and Avon had met and begun working together, it seemed Avon had unwittingly made several foolish deals that resulted in certain companies receiving the rights to his advancements due to his untimely demise. Were it not for the thorough investigation into the cause of his death, Valare could almost believe the man had been assassinated by one of the more greedy corporations.
Sighing, Emil returned to his work, soon taking up documents of recent events on Exavil. As he pondered the options he had before him, he thought back to the times of the civil war, when numerous indigenous people suddenly and violently protested the introduction of the Time-Space Administration Bureau. Caught off-guard during the conflict, the Bureau was not able to always extend its protection to far-out allies, and as the war raged on, many were forced to make due by hiring protection elsewhere, in the form of mercenary mages armed with advanced Devices and a plethora of combat spells. The corporations also used such mercenaries in their own private battles.
And as luck would have it, Emil noted as he flipped the stack to one of the more recent reports, We currently have one mercenary staying here right now…
In the past couple of weeks, Ailotana had become the impromptu home of a mercenary that had been fighting on Exavil since the beginning of the civil war. Caught up in the vicious battles that had occurred in growing frequency, his Storage Device had been damaged beyond all repair, and he had been forced to retire. But without the battlefield, he had nowhere else to go, and no way of life, and many would be terrified of such a person roaming about the countryside.
It was much to everyone’s surprise that Leganza’s only daughter had taken him in and offered him a home in the settlement.
Perhaps there was still a way to keep Ailotana on the map. Emil knew that for all of the things that had been taken after Avon’s death, they still had one item of importance, and now with this man, there may be hope for them all.
Emil sat back in his chair, the beginnings of a plan forming in his mind. Yes, perhaps it will work. Mercenaries are hard to come by these days, and the Kaiser knows there’s much need for them here.
A single sent message later, Valare looked up from his work when someone briefly knocked at the door. “Come in,” he invited, knowing who it was. The door opened to allow a young woman dressed in the same technician uniform worn by most Leganza Tech employees in the facility. The light blue fabric of the uniform contrasted nicely with the woman’s short auburn hair, and gray eyes looked at Emil with an expectant expression. “You called for me, Emil?” she asked, cocking her head to the side a bit.
“Ah, Mesia,” Valare greeted, smiling at the woman. He motioned for her to take a seat. “How are you doing, my dear?”
“I’m doing fine, Emil, you know that,” she returned as she took a seat on the opposite side of his desk. “It’s… been a while since my father died. I’m learning to move on.”
Leganza’s death had hit everyone hard, but Mesia the hardest of all. He had been the only remaining member of her family, and upon his passing, the corporations practically stripped the poor woman of her father’s legacy and any inheritance that might’ve made her life more bearable. Now, she was stuck working as an operator and technician in her father’s laboratory facility.
“I’m glad to hear it,” Emil said sincerely. “It’s been a hard time for us all.”
Mesia simply nodded, appreciating Emil’s concern but not requiring it—many people in Ailotana had given her their condolences, but now it was time to move on from that chapter in her life. Instead, it was time to focus on what the man before her wanted.
“Was there something you needed, Emil?” she asked, clasping her hands together in her lap.
“Yes. It’s about the man you brought to the settlement a few weeks ago,” Valare answered, nodding once. “I haven’t had much time to really sit down and speak with him at length, and I was curious as to how he was acclimating to Ailotana.”
“Roas? Well… he seems to be getting along well enough,” Mesia replied, sounding the tiniest bit confused. He’d never hinted that he wasn’t satisfied about his new circumstances. “He’s a bit quiet, but I haven’t heard any complaint from him.”
“Well now, that is comforting to know,” Valare said, nodding. “I have been speaking to some of the townsfolk about them, and they have been concerned. Understandable, considering who and what he is.”
“He’s not a bad person, Emil,” Mesia countered in defense. “I can tell he’s not—“
“Dangerous? Mesia, dear, I know you’re vouching for him, but the man is a mercenary, and one who’s been fighting on Exavil for a long time now. He’s as dangerous as they come, and you mustn’t forget that.”
The girl’s eyes hardened a bit, a sure sign she was going to be stubborn about something. She opened her mouth, meaning to argue back, but Valare lifted up a hand to forestall her. “Now, now, Mesia. For the record, I believe he means us no harm just as much as you do. The people are just concerned, that’s all—he’s been seen wandering around the settlement, looking restless. He’s been rather antisocial about it, rarely responding to any greeting beyond a simple nod.”
Mesia’s expression softened somewhat, a bit affirmed by what her father’s partner said concerning Roas’ character. “I try to keep him company when I’m not working,” she said. “Whenever I asked him how he’s doing, he’s always said he’s been doing fine. I get the feeling he likes it here, so I don’t see why he’d make everyone else think he’s a problem.”
Valare nodded understandingly, having a theory as to why the man would be acting how he was. And if that theory was correct, then he could use it to his advantage. “Perhaps he needs something to do, Mesia,” he volunteered. “Without his Storage Device, he has no means of seriously continuing his former occupation, and I haven’t heard of him applying for a job anywhere else.”
“You think that might be it?” she asked of him. He could almost see the gears turning in her head—he had no idea what it was that made the girl so interested in Roas, she was far beyond the age where her hormones would influence her every interaction with men and she had a good head on her shoulders—but if it’d help Ailotana, then his partner’s offspring and her fascination with Roas will have to be as much of a pawn in this as the man she’d welcomed into it.
“Why don’t you go talk to him about finding a job here, in the lab?” Valare suggested. “If he’s interested, have him join me, and we’ll have a talk about it. I’m certain that everyone will warm up to him while he’s under our care.”
After a moment, Mesia nodded. “All right, Emil. He might like that. Are you interested in him as a Device tester?”
“Something like that, yes,” he replied, nodding. There was one Device that he was certain Roas could make use of…
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Leganza Tech Enterprises. Such was the name of the four-story facility that stood before Roas Lacetti, according to the polished metal sign on the property lawn. It was the most advanced-looking structure this side of Ailotana’s river, and undoubtedly the grandest of the buildings in the entire settlement—it looked distinctly out of place, like something belonging on Mid-Childa, rather than Exavil. Still, it’s not like that should concern him too much, especially with Mesia suggesting he find a job there to kill the time. Sighing, he moved past the sign and down the path to the main entryway.
The receptionists at the front desk all looked surprised to see him there. He wasn’t too surprised at that; most people in Ailotana tended to give him such looks when he showed up. Roas paid it little mind as he approached them, lifting a hand in greeting. “Mesia said that Valare wanted to see me,” he said, hoping they knew about it. After the surprise wore off, one of the receptionists nodded rapidly.
“Yes, he informed us of a possible meeting, Mr. Lacetti,” the woman told him. “We’ll notify him right away.”
Roas nodded once, and waited off to the side as the woman quickly phoned for Emil Valare—she wasn’t a mage, it seemed, so she couldn’t just summon up a view screen like he and Valare could. He was somewhat tempted to call the man up himself, but he knew that it’d be far more polite to the people who were graciously allowing him to stay in their town. The mercenary knew it wouldn’t take much to make them change their minds, and he’d rather not find out just how much it’d take. It was hard enough finding a place to stay on Exavil as of late.
He was broken out of his reverie by the receptionist as she hung up the phone. “Mr. Lacetti? Mr. Valare will see you now. Please proceed through those doors and follow the lighted path to his workstation.”
The mercenary nodded his thanks and turned towards the referenced doors—two guards, each with pistols strapped to their hips, were standing on either side of it. He paid them no mind as he approached, and one of them unlocked the double doors for him so he could step through. As it closed behind him, he looked about in the hall, finding the path he was supposed to take. Sure enough, the tiled floor beneath his feet had a blue stripe running down the center of it, forking off towards each split and doorway. When he stepped into the hallway, that stripe started lighting up, heading down to the right towards an elevator.
That elevator automatically took Roas up to the third floor of the facility, and he continued the path, past mildly-surprised technicians and scientists to one particular door on the floor. There were no security guards here, so he had to let himself in with the keypad next to the door.
He immediately found Valare inside, alone with the room. He was wearing a technician uniform and a lab coat now, sitting at a chair while looking over a vast wealth of information displayed on a computer screen. Parts were strewn about over a work bench, each one having a separate scanning spell delve through it. Valare quickly noticed Roas’ presence, and brightened considerably at seeing him. “Ah, there you are!” he greeted, standing up. “Come in, I was hoping I’d see you soon.”
“You wanted to talk to me about something?” asked the mercenary as he walked in, letting the door shut behind him. He shook the hand that Valare offered him out of courtesy. Valare got a good look of him as he did so—like many soldiers, Roas had a hard look about him, which contrasted a bit to the decidedly bland uniform he’d been loaned. The brownish-blond hair and dark blue eyes also marked him as a foreigner; few native people on Exavil had such traits. It was little wonder the man tend to stand out in Ailotana.
“Straight to the point, I see. Yes, it’s come to my attention that the people around here think you could use something to do,” he said with a nod. “Now there’s nothing wrong with that, but even as nice as Ailotana is, I imagine it must get boring for you.”
Roas shrugged in response. It wasn’t that bad, but he was simply used to fighting. It’d be a long while since he’d gone so long without being assigned a mission by one of the companies residing on the planet. “It hasn’t been that bad,” he told Valare. “They’re just paranoid that I’m going to do something stupid.”
“Yes, I can see why you’d think that. Still, there’s nothing wrong with having something to do. After all, if you do plan on staying, you’ll need to find a job anyway.”
“So what’ve you got in mind?”
“Before we get into that, I wanted you to see something,” Valare said, motioning him over as he took his seat once more. He waved at the screen, causing the data to clear and an image for a device in its standby mode to appear in its place. “Tell me, do you know what this Device is?”
Roas joined the man and looked on as snippets of data scrolled across the screen, likely pertaining to the device. The view window displayed the device opening up into its default form, a long staff similar to a battleaxe or pole arm plated in black. He recognized it easily enough.
“It’s an Intelligent Device,” he said, getting a nod from Valare. “Bardiche, I think it’s called. One of the Bureau’s top officers wields it.”
“Quite right. Bardiche here is the Device used by Captain Fate T. Harlaown of Lost Property Riot Force Six,” Valare explained as Roas nodded. “The new force being implemented by the Bureau when it comes to Lost Logia.” He spared the mercenary a look. “I take it you’ve met her before? On the battlefield, perhaps?”
Roas snorted, surprising the man. “Not at all. I may be good, but I don’t think I’ve reached her level yet. No, that woman’s an Enforcer, and a damn good one from what I can tell. Any mercenary who wants to have a lasting career knows to keep track of the Enforcers, her in particular. We’re not exactly legal, after all, and she’s probably the last person we’d want to run afoul of.”
“Hmm, I suppose you’re right, that would be a good policy to keep,” Valare commented. It was good to know that the man before him wasn’t overconfident in his skills.
“Why are you showing me this, anyway?” Roas asked.
“Well, Captain Harlaown’s Device is a bit unique as far as Intelligent Devices go. As you know, most of them are primarily used for advanced spellcasting. Bardiche, however, has been designed with melee combat in mind. In fact, it’s said that it’s on par with most Armed Devices in use these days, possibly even superior to them.”
Slowly, the mercenary nodded, agreeing with the assessment. Intelligent Devices never were ideal for close-in combat, especially with their advanced A.I. installed. Never mind the usual stigmas on them, such Devices were simply better suited for long-range bombardment magic or combat support roles on the battlefield.
“This one, from what I’ve learned, has been like this even before it was used as a prototype for the Bureau’s cartridge systems.”
“What?” Roas asked. He hadn’t heard that particular tidbit before.
“Oh yes,” Valare said, nodding, bringing up a control panel. A few commands were entered, and the main screen displayed a close-up of the installed CVK-792 Cartridge System in action. “While it’s well known that it is one of a number of Intelligent Devices equipped with the system, not many people know that Bardiche and another well-known Device, Raising Heart, served as prototypes for adjusting the system for safer use. Still, Bardiche was notable for its melee combat capabilities even before it had the system installed. Nothing spectacular compared to your average Armed Device, mind you, but…”
“… still an accomplishment as far as Device making goes,” Roas finished for him. He stepped closer to the screen to get a better look at the parts load-out of the Device. “Huh… that’s a lot of non-standard equipment. This was custom-built?”
Valare nodded. “From the looks of it, yes. It’s not one of the standard models produced by any of the corporations in the Device-making market,” he said. “Avon always hoped that he could one day meet the person who constructed Bardiche, but I fear he never got the chance before he passed away.”
“You still haven’t answered my question,” Roas said, turning back to the man. He folded his arms, waiting for an answer.
“Yes, I suppose I haven’t. Well, one of the things me and Avon were working on before his untimely death was an Intelligent Device based loosely on Bardiche. It too is nothing standard… you won’t find anything like it on Leganza Tech’s production lines. And thankfully, those blasted contracts that he made before we met didn’t include this, so it’s one of the few things we still have under our control.”
Once more, Valare cleared the screen and brought up a different Device. Somewhat similar to Bardiche’s standby form, this one looked arrow-shaped in appearance, though Roas noted that the assigned dimensions made it narrower and somewhat smaller in appearance; likely convenient for use as a pendant when not in use. A green lens in the shape of a sharp V slashed down the middle of the silver plating, likely as a communication interface for the Device. Beneath the image was an informational bank and parts load-out, as well as the Device’s designated name in flowery Mid-Childan script: LANCEL.
“Unfortunately, our current low funds means we can’t outfit it with your standard Belkan Cartridge System,” Valare said, noting the mercenary’s examination. “Have you had any experience using that part?”
“Not really,” came the reply. “I was taught using the Mid-Childa style of magic, and the CVK-792 part requires an A.I. specialization far more advanced than what the average Storage Device uses.”
Roas realized belatedly how stupid he must’ve sounded; telling a Device technician the requirements needed for different parts on the different types of Devices available.
Valare, however, only looked appreciative of Roas’ wisdom. Now here was a man who took his job, however legally questionable it may be, quite seriously. He had familiarized himself with the intricate workings of different Devices, which means the man paid careful attention to detail—likely needed the know-how when identifying his opponents’ capabilities. Surely anyone who lasted this long in Exavil’s civil conflict would’ve faced other skilled mercenaries in combat. It’d make selling this idea to him easier… or possibly harder, if Roas was shrewder than he let on.
“So, what?” asked the man in question. “You want me to test it out or something? I’m sure you have people here who are more qualified in that manner. People who have actual qualifications, in fact.”
“Oh, you’re right about that,” Valare replied. “But I didn’t invite you here to invite you as a Device tester, whatever Mesia may have said to you.”
One more command locked down the room and shut off the security cameras for the chamber, causing Roas to still and arch an eyebrow at the man.
“I’ll be frank with you, Mr. Lacetti. Right now, Ailotana is in a bad place. Avon was our only true source of innovation, and when he died the corporations he had agreements with stripped us of anything we could’ve used to keep ourselves afloat. If things don’t change, Ailotana will lose all of its value and it’ll only be a matter of time before the fighting happens here, or one of the corporations decides our land is prime real estate and makes sure we empty out of it.”
Roas frowned, and Valare could tell the man could see where this was going. Yes, this man was a smart one, that much was certain. He pressed on, hoping that this offer would be worth it. “It was a stroke of luck that Mesia found you and offered you a place among the settlement. Even more so that you no longer have a Device to continue your missions with,” he continued. “With a mercenary, we could offer services to people who need them in exchange for a fee. We start bringing income back into the settlement and keep ourselves useful in the eyes of everyone else. In exchange, you have a role to fulfill, and you aren’t forced to adapt to a new line of work. And, as I’ve just shown, I can provide you with access to a Device that I can assure you is far more advanced than the old Storage Device you were using before it was destroyed.”
Okay, this wasn’t what he was expecting when he came here. “You can’t be serious,” Roas said, standing up straighter. “You really think my help alone would be enough to keep this place out of trouble?”
“With the proper choices made, yes. It is risky, I know, but at this point, I honestly don’t see what other choice we have,” Valare, said, leaning back in his seat and with his hands steepled together. “The people here have nowhere else to go while the fighting is still going on. They have homes here, built their lives here. And I’ll be damned if I let those blasted companies take that away from them!”
“And what about the Administration Bureau?” Roas countered, looking even more serious than before. “The only reason they haven’t fully come down on the corporations is because they’ve yet to trace us mercenaries back to them, but you—this place—it won’t be so lucky. If the Bureau finds out about you hiring me on for this, you’ll have Enforcers crawling down your throat before you can destroy the evidence.”
“It’s a risk we’ll have to take,” Valare said immediately. “And not something you have to worry about—you leave dealing with the Bureau to me, Mr. Lacetti, and I promise you it’ll all work out. And even if it doesn’t… well, I doubt anyone here has the capability to stop you from escaping, with or without a Device at your command. Really, my boy, you have nothing to lose from such an arrangement, and everything to gain.”
Roas broke his gaze from the scheming technician, weighing the options in his head. He did somewhat believe that the man could pull off keeping such an operation a secret from the Administration Bureau; Emil Valare was well-known for being a shrewd negotiator in business politics. Still, that wouldn’t be enough to completely remove all the risk of such a deal.
Still… this kind of thing was really the only thing he’d ever been good at, and the Bureau was never something he was too keen on working for. Not as one of their soldiers. His defeat still stung, and this man was now offering him a chance at returning to his old life, with even more power than before. It’d help him return the kindness Mesia and many in Ailotana had shown him already. It would do little his reputation in the long run, as well… Roas seriously doubted he was in the TSAB’s good graces at the moment, and even if he was an unknown to them currently, if they found out he’d be in a remarkably unfavorable position anyway.
He spared a glance at the screen, examining the Intelligent Device displayed on it one more time.
Let’s hope I don’t regret this, he thought, making his decision.
Mesia looked up from the park bench she sat on, only to scramble and catch the canned drink tossed to her. She gave Roas an unamused look as he walked over to the bench to sit, and cracked open the tab on the can. “Today’s been weird,” she said before taking a sip. “Emil wanted me to drop the project I’m working on and drag out our Intelligent Device from storage. I can’t understand why.”
Roas merely gave the woman a sidelong glance and took a swig from his own drink. He knew this was going to happen; it had only been a matter of time. The woman continued, leaning back into the bench. “There’s been rumors flying about too, it’s ridiculous,” she revealed. “Some crazy story about the lab hiring a mercenary. Some of them are even saying that you’re the one they’re hiring!”
The technician shook her head in exasperation, clearly finding the idea ridiculous. Roas, however, simply looked on, knowing better than to assuage his friend’s fears with falsities. Lowering the can from his lips, he asked, “Would my hiring for such a role be that much of a problem?”
The woman looked over at him for a moment before realization dawned. “Oh, Roas, you can’t be serious,” she cried, dismayed.
His response was to look off and take a quick swig of his drink. “Valare wanted me to come in later today to pick up the Device,” he said after lowering the can.
Mesia uttered a soft curse, looking confused. “Why in the world are you being hired on as a mercenary?” she demanded.
“Because if Valare’s to be believed, Ailotana doesn’t really have any other choice,” responded her companion. He went on to explain the information that the businessman had revealed to him concerning the settlement’s state. By the time he was done, the woman had grown quiet.
“He never mentioned…” she started, looking distraught. “Never even hinted that…”
Abruptly, the woman stood up, causing Roas to blink in surprise. “Where are you going?”
“To the lab,” she said, sounding firm. “I need to talk to Emil about this.”
He sighed. Well, he might as well go pick up Lancel… “Alright, let’s go then,” he said as he stood up to follow her. “I have business there anyway.”
Roas had expected something like this to happen, seeing Valare and Mesia engage in a heated discussion in front of the lab room’s monitor. The technician that had been aiding the man preparing the Intelligent Device was beside him, looking anxiously between his two colleagues.
“Think about what you’re doing!” the redhead exclaimed, almost throwing her arms up in the air. “If the Administration Bureau finds out, this lab would be history!”
“A risk that needs to be taken,” Emil replied calmly. “I assure you, every precaution will be taken regarding the Bureau, and any of the corporations who hire our services will want to keep it on the down-low from them anyway.”
“Oh? And what about Roas?” demanded the redhead. “You’ve read the report, you know how badly the other mercenaries wanted him dead! There’s no way he can do this alone!”
Roas lifted an eyebrow that that—though he supposed it was true enough. That last mission had nearly seen his death due to the unexpected amount of resistance from the mercenary, or rather, the mercenaries that had been hired by his target for their protection. Still, it was a risk in this kind of industry. He knew that well enough.
“Relax, dear girl,” Emil waved her down. “I’m not so foolish enough to send the man out alone. I know for certain that you’ll be able to provide him the best support possible.”
Mesia blinked, caught off guard. “… excuse me?”
“Well, you have all the qualifications necessary for such a task,” Valare explained, smiling. “You’re intelligent and a quick thinker, you’re familiar with all of Lancel’s components and technical capabilities, and you’re quite skilled with barrier and teleportation spells… you’d be perfect as Mr. Lacetti’s operator.”
“That’d be useful,” the aforementioned mercenary spoke up, drawing their attention before Mesia could formulate a response. “All the good operators are usually snapped up by the Bureau.”
Mesia sputtered, still surprised by the sudden turn in the argument. “W-well it’s true that the Bureau offered me a position, but—“
“That only goes to show how well-suited you’d be for this position,” Valare butted in, causing the woman to blush slightly. Roas was only nodding approval, and it came to Mesia’s attention that she’d walked right into that little trap. Her face colored in irritation, but before she could continue her argument, Emil placed a hand on her shoulder.
“This isn’t a decision that I made lightly, Mesia, but it’s the only option we have now,” he said soothingly. “We need him to make sure this settlement stays safe, and to do that I need you to make sure he stays safe.”
Mesia released a breath. “I just don’t understand why this needs to be done,” she admitted. “Ailotana can’t really be that bad off, could it?”
“If we don’t prove the settlement worthy in some way, it’s only a matter of time before we lose it entirely to corporate politics,” Emil said gravely. “I’ll explain it to you in detail later. For now, it’s time for us to give Mr. Lacetti his new Device. Jerome, if you please?”
The assistant standing beside started, then nodded quickly. He turned to the wall, which showed uniform rows of small metal storage containers. He brought up a holographic screen and inputted a few commands, and one particular container slid out of the wall with a hiss, allowing him to take the Device out from storage and present it to Roas, who accepted it into his open hands. Stepping back, the mercenary looked down at the arrow-shaped Lancel. It was bigger than he thought it would be. The green lens set into it blinked brightly for a moment.
“So you’re to be my new Device, huh?” Roas commented.
”Affirmative, master,” came Lancel’s reply in a smooth male voice. Roas frowned a bit at the title.
“When you’re ready, we’ll upload your information into Lancel’s database,” Emil said, stepping up to Roas. “Then you can begin getting acclimated with the Device. And we’ll need to get that done soon.”
“Why?” Roas asked, turning to him. “What’s the rush?”
“Because I’ve already got your first mission lined up, and we can begin when you’re ready.”
Well then, here goes. Crosspost from the FFT--I'll post the intro to the chapter with it as well (it's the same as the teaser I posted some time back). I'll get the character profiles for the OCs up eventually, when I have a scanner that I can actually work with.
Spoiler for Chapter 1 Intro:
It had already been over a day since the fateful and brutal attack on Ailotana, and yet the sun still seemed to struggle to pierce through the ominous, black clouds that drifted overhead. And with evening fast approaching, it was like the sun had given up on this futile battle against the bleak weather, and as it set, the destroyed settlement was painted in orange that glowed against the black. Nearly all of the structures in the settlement were charred and blown apart in the attack, leaving them gutted and broken, with the streets full of debris—clean-up efforts had been hazardous so far. A wind cut through the site, but it offered no coolness or comfort to the beleaguered survivors or the relief crew from the Time-Space Administration Bureau. It was uncomfortably warm and humid, adding to the miserable atmosphere and the terrible conditions the survivors were facing.
Junior Enforcer Teana Lanster sighed and brushed a strand of reddish-orange hair from her face, doing her best to ignore the wind that was blowing through the ruins of Ailotana. Behind her, in the nearby valley, several tents had been erected to help care for the injured survivors that the rescue squad had been able to recover from the destroyed buildings. But for every survivor they had managed to find, there seemed to be three more body bags, which were all laid out a short distance from the tents.
But it was what lay before her that had caught her interest, in the plain that lay just before the entrance to Ailotana. Off in its center, surrounded by mages in protective clothing, stood a massive construct, nearly twice the size of a full-grown man. The sleek armor plating was easily seen from the distance, perhaps because of the eerie, foul glow of magical energy that, even now, still seemed to burn off of it like a funeral pyre. The amount of magic was so dense, and so dangerous, that nearing it without the protection of a barrier jacket and proper shielding spells would grant the unlucky ones something akin to radiation poisoning.
The same radiation poisoning that now afflicted nearly all of the survivors of Ailotana.
“Teana.”
The girl turned to see her superior officer walking up the hill to her. She nodded to Fate briefly as she crested the hill and stopped beside her, then turned her gaze back to the armor below.
“Have they discovered anything new?” the older woman asked, also looking down to where the mages worked on purging the harmful magic from the area.
“We’ve managed to identify the armor’s wearer,” Teana replied slowly, bringing up the file in a holographic window. “It’s him, Fate. I’m sorry.”
Fate’s expression seemed to fall slightly, disappointed at the knowledge. “I see. Any idea why he’d attack this place? I thought the two of them were friends, of a sort.”
“We’re still not sure,” Teana replied. “His Device wasn’t on his person, even though the armor seems to require one to operate. We think it was taken after his death.”
The other Enforcer nodded briefly. “Let me know if you discover anything else. Especially anything pertaining to—”
She was quickly interrupted by the yell of another one of the officers on site. “Ma’am, you’d better come and see this!”
Both women turned at the sound of the voice, which came from the direction of the medical campsite. “Stay here and keep an eye on the investigation, Teana,” Fate ordered softly.
The younger woman quickly nodded. “Yes ma’am.”
Fate proceeded back down the hill and joined the other TSAB official before they made their way towards the camp at a brisk pace. “We’ve managed to identify one of the survivors, ma’am,” the officer informed her as they approached. “He’s in recovery right now, but the medics say he’s able to talk now.”
“Understood,” Fate replied, nodding once. “Maybe now we can find out what happened here. Show me where he is.”
“Right away, ma’am.”
He took her to one of the smaller tents used for patients with more serious injuries, and reported to the guard stationed at its entrance, while Fate proceeded inside. Two medics were watching over a single elderly man resting in the wheeled bed in the center. I.V. lines had been administered to the back of his hands, and the skin around his balding head looked slightly mottled and unnaturally pale. His breath was coming in long rasps, though he didn’t seem to look like he was suffering from a breathing problem. His eyes, thankfully, were alert, and despite his fragile condition, he shifted to rise as he spotted Fate enter the tent.
“Please, rest,” she said to the man, one Emil Valare, motioning for him to lie back down. Valare considered it for a brief moment and acquiesced.
“I shouldn’t be surprised that you were the one who investigated this catastrophe, Ms. Harlaown,” he said amiably, settling back down. “Not with everything that’s happened lately.”
Fate nodded. “You witnessed the fight, didn’t you?” She asked, sitting at the corner of the bed. Valare nodded. “You know who’s responsible for this tragedy.”
“I do. It’s a shame, really,” Valare said wistfully, looking off to the side. “He showed such promise, only to come to an end like this. At the very least, those two managed to stop him.”
“We never really knew everything that happened since we met him,” Fate said quietly—they both knew it wasn’t the one in the armor that she spoke of. A nurse approached and began writing off a reading on the machine Valare was hooked up to. “He never told us, and she never broke his confidence, even during their time with us.”
“That doesn’t surprise me. He never was much for other people.”
“Perhaps you can tell us, then,” suggested the Enforcer. “We need to know, so we can figure out where to go from here. Everything, from the beginning.”
Emil glanced at the woman, only to see her patient face. Slowly, he nodded. “I suppose we owe you that much.
“Some time ago, Ailotana lost its greatest scientific mind. It was the death of a legend, and with it, a mass pilfering of his technology,” he started, clasping spindly fingers together as he recollected. “The man she saved was an unrivaled mercenary, and we paired him with an Intelligent Device that Research and Development had been using in their experiments. Our settlement fell into a sharp financial crisis after we lost our edge in the technology market. Relying on a mercenary was the inevitable resolution to keep food on the table.”
The man suddenly began coughing, and he brought a hand up to cover his mouth while the fit subsided. Fate looked concerned and made to rise, but he quickly waved at her to stay seated. After a moment, he was able to continue. “I used that man… and through him, her. I make no claim of righteousness. He was simply the only one who could have made it happen."
MAGICAL GIRL LYRICAL NANOHA:
THE COLLARED
CHAPTER ONE:
A Nonexistent Choice
Spoiler for Chapter 1 Scene 1:
It had been several months—close to half a year, really—since the death of Professor Avon Leganza, but Ailotana was still feeling the sting of his passing. The man, a scientist known for his prowess at developing and refining cutting-edge Device technology, was the greatest, but unfortunately the only asset the settlement had since the civil war had begun to die down and the Time-Space Administration Bureau reasserted itself on the newly-Administered world of Exavil. Since then, various companies and corporations had begun to move into the resource-rich planet, despite warnings and from the Bureau that hostilities on the planet had yet to come to a complete end.
The various towns and cities that had come out of the battles had to rely on these companies to rebuild their failing economies, but as such, there were still tensions in the air as those who were against the support of the TSAB waited to prey upon those that had. And Ailotana had just become one such viable target—with Leganza’s passing, a nightmare of paperwork and procedure had left most of his research and discoveries taken by the corporations that had once worked alongside the man, leaving the settlement with little else. Now, without the help of Leganza’s achievements in Device development, Ailotana looked to be on the verge of bankruptcy.
So what to do? That was the question that Emil Valare currently faced.
Valare had worked as both an assistant and an advisor to Avon Leganza, having extensive knowledge on Device creation and repair, but his true talents lay in politics, and he had aided Leganza in making the most favorable contracts with the growing corporations inhabiting Exavil, seeing what schemes might be in the making and guiding him and Ailotana out of harm’s way. Now, with Leganza dead, he was the most qualified person to get the settlement out of the mess it was in.
But how? he wondered. Due to the loophole in those first contracts, the corporations have left us with practically nothing to work with!
He shook his head in disgust for the way the companies worked. Before he and Avon had met and begun working together, it seemed Avon had unwittingly made several foolish deals that resulted in certain companies receiving the rights to his advancements due to his untimely demise. Were it not for the thorough investigation into the cause of his death, Valare could almost believe the man had been assassinated by one of the more greedy corporations.
Sighing, Emil returned to his work, soon taking up documents of recent events on Exavil. As he pondered the options he had before him, he thought back to the times of the civil war, when numerous indigenous people suddenly and violently protested the introduction of the Time-Space Administration Bureau. Caught off-guard during the conflict, the Bureau was not able to always extend its protection to far-out allies, and as the war raged on, many were forced to make due by hiring protection elsewhere, in the form of mercenary mages armed with advanced Devices and a plethora of combat spells. The corporations also used such mercenaries in their own private battles.
And as luck would have it, Emil noted as he flipped the stack to one of the more recent reports, We currently have one mercenary staying here right now…
In the past couple of weeks, Ailotana had become the impromptu home of a mercenary that had been fighting on Exavil since the beginning of the civil war. Caught up in the vicious battles that had occurred in growing frequency, his Storage Device had been damaged beyond all repair, and he had been forced to retire. But without the battlefield, he had nowhere else to go, and no way of life, and many would be terrified of such a person roaming about the countryside.
It was much to everyone’s surprise that Leganza’s only daughter had taken him in and offered him a home in the settlement.
Perhaps there was still a way to keep Ailotana on the map. Emil knew that for all of the things that had been taken after Avon’s death, they still had one item of importance, and now with this man, there may be hope for them all.
Emil sat back in his chair, the beginnings of a plan forming in his mind. Yes, perhaps it will work. Mercenaries are hard to come by these days, and the Kaiser knows there’s much need for them here.
A single sent message later, Valare looked up from his work when someone briefly knocked at the door. “Come in,” he invited, knowing who it was. The door opened to allow a young woman dressed in the same technician uniform worn by most Leganza Tech employees in the facility. The light blue fabric of the uniform contrasted nicely with the woman’s short auburn hair, and gray eyes looked at Emil with an expectant expression. “You called for me, Emil?” she asked, cocking her head to the side a bit.
“Ah, Mesia,” Valare greeted, smiling at the woman. He motioned for her to take a seat. “How are you doing, my dear?”
“I’m doing fine, Emil, you know that,” she returned as she took a seat on the opposite side of his desk. “It’s… been a while since my father died. I’m learning to move on.”
Leganza’s death had hit everyone hard, but Mesia the hardest of all. He had been the only remaining member of her family, and upon his passing, the corporations practically stripped the poor woman of her father’s legacy and any inheritance that might’ve made her life more bearable. Now, she was stuck working as an operator and technician in her father’s laboratory facility.
“I’m glad to hear it,” Emil said sincerely. “It’s been a hard time for us all.”
Mesia simply nodded, appreciating Emil’s concern but not requiring it—many people in Ailotana had given her their condolences, but now it was time to move on from that chapter in her life. Instead, it was time to focus on what the man before her wanted.
“Was there something you needed, Emil?” she asked, clasping her hands together in her lap.
“Yes. It’s about the man you brought to the settlement a few weeks ago,” Valare answered, nodding once. “I haven’t had much time to really sit down and speak with him at length, and I was curious as to how he was acclimating to Ailotana.”
“Roas? Well… he seems to be getting along well enough,” Mesia replied, sounding the tiniest bit confused. He’d never hinted that he wasn’t satisfied about his new circumstances. “He’s a bit quiet, but I haven’t heard any complaint from him.”
“Well now, that is comforting to know,” Valare said, nodding. “I have been speaking to some of the townsfolk about them, and they have been concerned. Understandable, considering who and what he is.”
“He’s not a bad person, Emil,” Mesia countered in defense. “I can tell he’s not—“
“Dangerous? Mesia, dear, I know you’re vouching for him, but the man is a mercenary, and one who’s been fighting on Exavil for a long time now. He’s as dangerous as they come, and you mustn’t forget that.”
The girl’s eyes hardened a bit, a sure sign she was going to be stubborn about something. She opened her mouth, meaning to argue back, but Valare lifted up a hand to forestall her. “Now, now, Mesia. For the record, I believe he means us no harm just as much as you do. The people are just concerned, that’s all—he’s been seen wandering around the settlement, looking restless. He’s been rather antisocial about it, rarely responding to any greeting beyond a simple nod.”
Mesia’s expression softened somewhat, a bit affirmed by what her father’s partner said concerning Roas’ character. “I try to keep him company when I’m not working,” she said. “Whenever I asked him how he’s doing, he’s always said he’s been doing fine. I get the feeling he likes it here, so I don’t see why he’d make everyone else think he’s a problem.”
Valare nodded understandingly, having a theory as to why the man would be acting how he was. And if that theory was correct, then he could use it to his advantage. “Perhaps he needs something to do, Mesia,” he volunteered. “Without his Storage Device, he has no means of seriously continuing his former occupation, and I haven’t heard of him applying for a job anywhere else.”
“You think that might be it?” she asked of him. He could almost see the gears turning in her head—he had no idea what it was that made the girl so interested in Roas, she was far beyond the age where her hormones would influence her every interaction with men and she had a good head on her shoulders—but if it’d help Ailotana, then his partner’s offspring and her fascination with Roas will have to be as much of a pawn in this as the man she’d welcomed into it.
“Why don’t you go talk to him about finding a job here, in the lab?” Valare suggested. “If he’s interested, have him join me, and we’ll have a talk about it. I’m certain that everyone will warm up to him while he’s under our care.”
After a moment, Mesia nodded. “All right, Emil. He might like that. Are you interested in him as a Device tester?”
“Something like that, yes,” he replied, nodding. There was one Device that he was certain Roas could make use of…
Long fic is long. I'm going to do this in chapters so that I can read everything at a steady pace and make a concrete reply instead of rushing through everything. Bluecheesium of this caliber is rare these days, so it should be treasured.
Not all that much to say about the first chapter. It's an establishing chapter, so there's obviously not much action going on. The prologue does a nice job at raising interest, so points for that. There's a few OC's -in fact, only OC's- dumped on you in the first chapter, but there's a good introduction for them. The mercenary and his girlfriend are explained decently, though Roas could benefit from a little more in-dept explanation why people are so nervous of him. He's a mercenary from Exavil, but why does that make people nervous? Shouldn't they feel safer with a mercenary around? He's not against them, after all.
Beyond that, a good introduction. World established, groundwork for characters established, and a plot waiting to hatch.
I've actually got a couple more scenes to post up; just two more and the chapter'll be complete. So yeah, it's long enough as it is, so I'll need to establish the nervousness about Roas in the second chapter. I hadn't thought about it much, really, so it's a good point. But considering the subject of the next chapter, it'd be better off posted there rather than in this chapter, length aside.
Leganza Tech Enterprises. Such was the name of the four-story facility that stood before Roas Lacetti, according to the polished metal sign on the property lawn. It was the most advanced-looking structure this side of Ailotana’s river, and undoubtedly the grandest of the buildings in the entire settlement—it looked distinctly out of place, like something belonging on Mid-Childa, rather than Exavil. Still, it’s not like that should concern him too much, especially with Mesia suggesting he find a job there to kill the time. Sighing, he moved past the sign and down the path to the main entryway.
The receptionists at the front desk all looked surprised to see him there. He wasn’t too surprised at that; most people in Ailotana tended to give him such looks when he showed up. Roas paid it little mind as he approached them, lifting a hand in greeting. “Mesia said that Valare wanted to see me,” he said, hoping they knew about it. After the surprise wore off, one of the receptionists nodded rapidly.
“Yes, he informed us of a possible meeting, Mr. Lacetti,” the woman told him. “We’ll notify him right away.”
Roas nodded once, and waited off to the side as the woman quickly phoned for Emil Valare—she wasn’t a mage, it seemed, so she couldn’t just summon up a view screen like he and Valare could. He was somewhat tempted to call the man up himself, but he knew that it’d be far more polite to the people who were graciously allowing him to stay in their town. The mercenary knew it wouldn’t take much to make them change their minds, and he’d rather not find out just how much it’d take. It was hard enough finding a place to stay on Exavil as of late.
He was broken out of his reverie by the receptionist as she hung up the phone. “Mr. Lacetti? Mr. Valare will see you now. Please proceed through those doors and follow the lighted path to his workstation.”
The mercenary nodded his thanks and turned towards the referenced doors—two guards, each with pistols strapped to their hips, were standing on either side of it. He paid them no mind as he approached, and one of them unlocked the double doors for him so he could step through. As it closed behind him, he looked about in the hall, finding the path he was supposed to take. Sure enough, the tiled floor beneath his feet had a blue stripe running down the center of it, forking off towards each split and doorway. When he stepped into the hallway, that stripe started lighting up, heading down to the right towards an elevator.
That elevator automatically took Roas up to the third floor of the facility, and he continued the path, past mildly-surprised technicians and scientists to one particular door on the floor. There were no security guards here, so he had to let himself in with the keypad next to the door.
He immediately found Valare inside, alone with the room. He was wearing a technician uniform and a lab coat now, sitting at a chair while looking over a vast wealth of information displayed on a computer screen. Parts were strewn about over a work bench, each one having a separate scanning spell delve through it. Valare quickly noticed Roas’ presence, and brightened considerably at seeing him. “Ah, there you are!” he greeted, standing up. “Come in, I was hoping I’d see you soon.”
“You wanted to talk to me about something?” asked the mercenary as he walked in, letting the door shut behind him. He shook the hand that Valare offered him out of courtesy. Valare got a good look of him as he did so—like many soldiers, Roas had a hard look about him, which contrasted a bit to the decidedly bland uniform he’d been loaned. The brownish-blond hair and dark blue eyes also marked him as a foreigner; few native people on Exavil had such traits. It was little wonder the man tend to stand out in Ailotana.
“Straight to the point, I see. Yes, it’s come to my attention that the people around here think you could use something to do,” he said with a nod. “Now there’s nothing wrong with that, but even as nice as Ailotana is, I imagine it must get boring for you.”
Roas shrugged in response. It wasn’t that bad, but he was simply used to fighting. It’d be a long while since he’d gone so long without being assigned a mission by one of the companies residing on the planet. “It hasn’t been that bad,” he told Valare. “They’re just paranoid that I’m going to do something stupid.”
“Yes, I can see why you’d think that. Still, there’s nothing wrong with having something to do. After all, if you do plan on staying, you’ll need to find a job anyway.”
“So what’ve you got in mind?”
“Before we get into that, I wanted you to see something,” Valare said, motioning him over as he took his seat once more. He waved at the screen, causing the data to clear and an image for a device in its standby mode to appear in its place. “Tell me, do you know what this Device is?”
Roas joined the man and looked on as snippets of data scrolled across the screen, likely pertaining to the device. The view window displayed the device opening up into its default form, a long staff similar to a battleaxe or pole arm plated in black. He recognized it easily enough.
“It’s an Intelligent Device,” he said, getting a nod from Valare. “Bardiche, I think it’s called. One of the Bureau’s top officers wields it.”
“Quite right. Bardiche here is the Device used by Captain Fate T. Harlaown of Lost Property Riot Force Six,” Valare explained as Roas nodded. “The new force being implemented by the Bureau when it comes to Lost Logia.” He spared the mercenary a look. “I take it you’ve met her before? On the battlefield, perhaps?”
Roas snorted, surprising the man. “Not at all. I may be good, but I don’t think I’ve reached her level yet. No, that woman’s an Enforcer, and a damn good one from what I can tell. Any mercenary who wants to have a lasting career knows to keep track of the Enforcers, her in particular. We’re not exactly legal, after all, and she’s probably the last person we’d want to run afoul of.”
“Hmm, I suppose you’re right, that would be a good policy to keep,” Valare commented. It was good to know that the man before him wasn’t overconfident in his skills.
“Why are you showing me this, anyway?” Roas asked.
“Well, Captain Harlaown’s Device is a bit unique as far as Intelligent Devices go. As you know, most of them are primarily used for advanced spellcasting. Bardiche, however, has been designed with melee combat in mind. In fact, it’s said that it’s on par with most Armed Devices in use these days, possibly even superior to them.”
Slowly, the mercenary nodded, agreeing with the assessment. Intelligent Devices never were ideal for close-in combat, especially with their advanced A.I. installed. Never mind the usual stigmas on them, such Devices were simply better suited for long-range bombardment magic or combat support roles on the battlefield.
“This one, from what I’ve learned, has been like this even before it was used as a prototype for the Bureau’s cartridge systems.”
“What?” Roas asked. He hadn’t heard that particular tidbit before.
“Oh yes,” Valare said, nodding, bringing up a control panel. A few commands were entered, and the main screen displayed a close-up of the installed CVK-792 Cartridge System in action. “While it’s well known that it is one of a number of Intelligent Devices equipped with the system, not many people know that Bardiche and another well-known Device, Raising Heart, served as prototypes for adjusting the system for safer use. Still, Bardiche was notable for its melee combat capabilities even before it had the system installed. Nothing spectacular compared to your average Armed Device, mind you, but…”
“… still an accomplishment as far as Device making goes,” Roas finished for him. He stepped closer to the screen to get a better look at the parts load-out of the Device. “Huh… that’s a lot of non-standard equipment. This was custom-built?”
Valare nodded. “From the looks of it, yes. It’s not one of the standard models produced by any of the corporations in the Device-making market,” he said. “Avon always hoped that he could one day meet the person who constructed Bardiche, but I fear he never got the chance before he passed away.”
“You still haven’t answered my question,” Roas said, turning back to the man. He folded his arms, waiting for an answer.
“Yes, I suppose I haven’t. Well, one of the things me and Avon were working on before his untimely death was an Intelligent Device based loosely on Bardiche. It too is nothing standard… you won’t find anything like it on Leganza Tech’s production lines. And thankfully, those blasted contracts that he made before we met didn’t include this, so it’s one of the few things we still have under our control.”
Once more, Valare cleared the screen and brought up a different Device. Somewhat similar to Bardiche’s standby form, this one looked arrow-shaped in appearance, though Roas noted that the assigned dimensions made it narrower and somewhat smaller in appearance; likely convenient for use as a pendant when not in use. A green lens in the shape of a sharp V slashed down the middle of the silver plating, likely as a communication interface for the Device. Beneath the image was an informational bank and parts load-out, as well as the Device’s designated name in flowery Mid-Childan script: LANCEL.
“Unfortunately, our current low funds means we can’t outfit it with your standard Belkan Cartridge System,” Valare said, noting the mercenary’s examination. “Have you had any experience using that part?”
“Not really,” came the reply. “I was taught using the Mid-Childa style of magic, and the CVK-792 part requires an A.I. specialization far more advanced than what the average Storage Device uses.”
Roas realized belatedly how stupid he must’ve sounded; telling a Device technician the requirements needed for different parts on the different types of Devices available.
Valare, however, only looked appreciative of Roas’ wisdom. Now here was a man who took his job, however legally questionable it may be, quite seriously. He had familiarized himself with the intricate workings of different Devices, which means the man paid careful attention to detail—likely needed the know-how when identifying his opponents’ capabilities. Surely anyone who lasted this long in Exavil’s civil conflict would’ve faced other skilled mercenaries in combat. It’d make selling this idea to him easier… or possibly harder, if Roas was shrewder than he let on.
“So, what?” asked the man in question. “You want me to test it out or something? I’m sure you have people here who are more qualified in that manner. People who have actual qualifications, in fact.”
“Oh, you’re right about that,” Valare replied. “But I didn’t invite you here to invite you as a Device tester, whatever Mesia may have said to you.”
One more command locked down the room and shut off the security cameras for the chamber, causing Roas to still and arch an eyebrow at the man.
“I’ll be frank with you, Mr. Lacetti. Right now, Ailotana is in a bad place. Avon was our only true source of innovation, and when he died the corporations he had agreements with stripped us of anything we could’ve used to keep ourselves afloat. If things don’t change, Ailotana will lose all of its value and it’ll only be a matter of time before the fighting happens here, or one of the corporations decides our land is prime real estate and makes sure we empty out of it.”
Roas frowned, and Valare could tell the man could see where this was going. Yes, this man was a smart one, that much was certain. He pressed on, hoping that this offer would be worth it. “It was a stroke of luck that Mesia found you and offered you a place among the settlement. Even more so that you no longer have a Device to continue your missions with,” he continued. “With a mercenary, we could offer services to people who need them in exchange for a fee. We start bringing income back into the settlement and keep ourselves useful in the eyes of everyone else. In exchange, you have a role to fulfill, and you aren’t forced to adapt to a new line of work. And, as I’ve just shown, I can provide you with access to a Device that I can assure you is far more advanced than the old Storage Device you were using before it was destroyed.”
Okay, this wasn’t what he was expecting when he came here. “You can’t be serious,” Roas said, standing up straighter. “You really think my help alone would be enough to keep this place out of trouble?”
“With the proper choices made, yes. It is risky, I know, but at this point, I honestly don’t see what other choice we have,” Valare, said, leaning back in his seat and with his hands steepled together. “The people here have nowhere else to go while the fighting is still going on. They have homes here, built their lives here. And I’ll be damned if I let those blasted companies take that away from them!”
“And what about the Administration Bureau?” Roas countered, looking even more serious than before. “The only reason they haven’t fully come down on the corporations is because they’ve yet to trace us mercenaries back to them, but you—this place—it won’t be so lucky. If the Bureau finds out about you hiring me on for this, you’ll have Enforcers crawling down your throat before you can destroy the evidence.”
“It’s a risk we’ll have to take,” Valare said immediately. “And not something you have to worry about—you leave dealing with the Bureau to me, Mr. Lacetti, and I promise you it’ll all work out. And even if it doesn’t… well, I doubt anyone here has the capability to stop you from escaping, with or without a Device at your command. Really, my boy, you have nothing to lose from such an arrangement, and everything to gain.”
Roas broke his gaze from the scheming technician, weighing the options in his head. He did somewhat believe that the man could pull off keeping such an operation a secret from the Administration Bureau; Emil Valare was well-known for being a shrewd negotiator in business politics. Still, that wouldn’t be enough to completely remove all the risk of such a deal.
Still… this kind of thing was really the only thing he’d ever been good at, and the Bureau was never something he was too keen on working for. Not as one of their soldiers. His defeat still stung, and this man was now offering him a chance at returning to his old life, with even more power than before. It’d help him return the kindness Mesia and many in Ailotana had shown him already. It would do little his reputation in the long run, as well… Roas seriously doubted he was in the TSAB’s good graces at the moment, and even if he was an unknown to them currently, if they found out he’d be in a remarkably unfavorable position anyway.
He spared a glance at the screen, examining the Intelligent Device displayed on it one more time.
Let’s hope I don’t regret this, he thought, making his decision.
A couple of background errors here, nothing plot-devastating but you might want to take a look at it. Viewscreens are more technology than magic. We see Regius summon a viewscreen in StrikerS, so as long as the technology is present the secretary should be able to do so as well.
Another bit is that the bureau did use cartridges before A's. Subaru's revolver knuckle was used by Quint for a long time after all. It also shows that an advanced AI is not needed for cartridge systems. Revolver Knuckle has no AI at all.
Hmm, okay, thought the screens were magic only. I'll correct that. And yes, I knew the Bureau had used cartridges before, what I was getting across is that they generally didn't use them with Intelligent Devices (at least for my story's purpose, but IIRC we haven't seen anyone else using an ID and cartridges together before A's). I thought Revolver Knuckle had an AI while Quint was using it, though.
But that does shoot holes in my justification for keeping Roas from the cartridge system so early in the story, as he was supposed to get one later. Guess I'll need to put some more thought into that.