Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by wanwan1203

Thanks for the links! It's easier to look for the rest of the story if I ever get lost.

If you ever get lost, look at the first page here, second post. I have a collection of things.

@thread: Front page has been updated over the past little while, please check to see if I am missing something of yours.

Evilrick, can I get the links to your posts where you put your drawings, or the rapidshare links?

[Krinen]

B Keepin' the tradition, baby. Keep this up, Sata-tan. (stopcyclingnicknamesyou.) It just keeps getting better. =3

[Satashi]

Help while picking who to go with in POV:

Nanoha: will get to see how she feels about riding with Fate, and having her arms around Fate.

Fate: Will get to see how she feels with Nanoha's arms around her.

Both will get extras.

So don't forget to think like that when you choose

[illidan182]

Ugh.. this is a tough one, but I want to see Nanoha's POV... sooo

A

@wanwan: lol, so you've seen my reveiws on FF.net hmm? Cool. Btw, it's not weird to read the reveiws, I do it also lol.


Lol, I'm kinda nevous and probally stupid for asking this, but think I should post the Nanoha Storys I'm currently working on here when their finished? I know their gonna go on FF.net as soon as they are, but as a new poster here I guess I'm just thinkin' to much... lol

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by illidan182

Lol, I'm kinda nevous and probally stupid for asking this, but think I should post the Nanoha Storys I'm currently working on here when their finished? I know their gonna go on FF.net as soon as they are, but as a new poster here I guess I'm just thinkin' to much... lol

Post them whenever you want. Doesn't matter if they are complete or not. Everyone here can offer advice and cheer you along ^^ don't worry about being new, you're just as welcome as if you were here for years~

[wanwan1203]

@illidan182
Post post post!!!
It's fun to read reviews of the stories you're reading right? You get to see speculations, friendly comments, omakes, bribes, the occasional "praise thee o great one! you're the best writer, like, evarrr!! best fanfic woooo xoxo", etc. Sometimes when I'm confused with the story, the reviews help lol. though sometimes I go >>> with what some people are saying. some of the death threats are scary..

[mercurianangel]

A~

Originally Posted by wanwan1203

Welcome to the thread!
*searches for Motorbike Rider Fate pictures* ... is there one in existence?? ;_; or do I have to settle with my Natsuki pictures?.. Or maybe mercurianangel can draw one?

eep >_<
I kinda suck at mechanical stuffs XD
I'd try it if I didn't have finals this week and next....
I still may when I get sick of studying but shhhhhh

and "settle" for Natsuki!? Blasphemy lol

[wanwan1203]

Originally Posted by mercurianangel

eep >_<
I kinda suck at mechanical stuffs XD
I'd try it if I didn't have finals this week and next....
-snip- :P -wanwan

and "settle" for Natsuki!? Blasphemy lol

Oh I see. It's ok. You can just do the leather suit. >.> <.< >.> *hides*

Ooh and no, Natsuki Kuga is always gonna be the number 1 girl for me! Fate comes in 3rd, rivaled only by Kan-u Unchou! And no amount of leather is gonna change that. Woot!!! I'm sorry Fate! D: lol

[Gillian]

Originally Posted by TheShinySword

Spoiler:

D: Satashi did it again...

Welcome anyways.


In other news.

It's not a new chapter of bodyguard!Nanoha but it's a little short that takes place somewhere in the timeline so enjoy

Spoiler for Bodyguard!Nanoha Sidestory:

“Damn damn damn damn,” Vita had been cursing for the past three hours. “Damn damn damn.” As much as I sympathized with her annoyance I couldn’t help but think that perhaps she could stand to be just a little quieter and not give me a headache.

It’d been an easy assignment. Normally I wouldn’t have come along but the boss had specifically requested it. I thumped the back of my head against the wall. Now I saw why. He’d probably knew this would happen.

Nanoha had been pacing for the last twenty minutes. She walked back and forth in the small room the three of us had been forced into, she was obviously in deep thought but she gave no hint to what it was she was thinking of. Of course if you knew her like we did you already knew exactly who it was.

“No news?” Nanoha kept pacing but she spoke to Vita.

Vita flipped open her cell phone, “Nothing. Those two must still be clearing out.”

I sighed. We were just supposed to inform them that the organization had no intention of paying off its debts and let Nanoha and Vita fire a few rounds, unfortunately they brought a few dozen too many guards. Signum and Zafira had gotten separated from us along the way and we had been forced to take shelter in this room.

Nanoha slammed her fist into the wall. “Damn it to hell!” She winced; walls didn’t make good punching bags.

“Calm down,” I whispered. “Don’t get worked up.”

Nanoha sighed and slid down beside me. “Yeah…”

Suddenly it hit me. It was a stretch but… it was our only shot. “I think we can get out of here.”

They both turned to look at me. And I begun to explain.



“’Oi dumbasses,” Vita poked me in the side with her gun. “Look I’ve got a hostage.”

Our opponents’ mouths hung open and their eyes twitched, “But that’s one of your guys we don’t care.”

Vita laughed, “Well we told this of hunk of uselessness to hide the money so the location’s in this head up there.” She pointed to my head.

The guys looked confused. “Why?”

Vita shrugged, “You know no one ever questions the boss’s orders.”

They nodded knowingly. “I understand. So what are your conditions?”

“Well me and Nanoha—”

“Nanoha and I,” I corrected earning myself a whack on the arm.

“Hostages don’t correct grammar!” She huffed. “Anyway we want to go free.”

Had they been smarter they might have noticed that I was wearing a sweatshirt that was obviously too small for me. Had they been smarter they might have noticed that though my arms were up one off my hands had retracted back into my sleeve and was busy removing the pistol there. Had they been smarter they wouldn’t have all bunched up and turned away from us except for two men with their guns trained on Vita and Nanoha. Luckily for me they weren’t smarter.

Bang. Bang. And it was also lucky that Vita liked to keep guns in every single possible area. Vita and Nanoha burst into action easily taking out half of them before they turned around.

I dove to the ground. This wasn’t my place after all, the fighting was best left to those who could do it best.

It seemed endless. Nanoha and Vita formed a wall around me with the actual wall as my other protection. Still it seemed we had no chance.

Bang. Bang. Two new guns entered the fray but these guns were on our side. I could tell it took all the years of training Nanoha and Vita went through to keep from calling out to Signum and Zafira.

A bizarre pride rose up in my chest as the final of our enemy enforcers ran away like a scared dog. It wasn’t that I approved of their line of work it was just something I couldn’t put my finger on.

Nanoha offered me her hand. She grinned, “You really got us out of the Yuuno.”

I blushed. “Well it was just luck that it worked out really.”

Nanoha grinned wider, “Well then I want to be as lucky as you.”

My name is Yuuno Scrya, I may not be able to help Nanoha as much as I’d like to but I’ll help her whenever I can.

On the Phantom of the lyrical front I'm having a little bit of trouble with the last third of the scene (the part with Yuuno and Nanoha ><) but I'll get through it
and I made this handy dandy thingy with links to all the parts (with space for the ones I haven't done yet ><) (in chronological order) so far. The original ones Eva did are 4, 5, 7 (yes there's a small scene that goes between 5 and 7.) and the special.

The Phantom of the Lyrical


Parts: Prologue, Part 2, Part 4,Part 5,Part 7 Part 8, Special


@.@




For some reason I have the urge to right Badass!Yuuno

Yunno, the rescue man

Originally Posted by Satashi

Nanoha

Spoiler for Vampire!Fate pt.11:

My pen danced across the paper quickly, jotting down almost everything that the professor said. The recorder in front of me was steadily flashing the yellow warning light to signal that it was almost out of space and I was worried about missing the last few minutes of class since I accidentally left my extra memory stick back home. Fortunately for me, the teacher finished a few minutes early and dismissed us with the standard 'have a blessed day'.

I flipped my books closed and took off my reading glasses to slip them into my backpack before putting it over both of my shoulders. I was used to the weight by now and hardly felt it as I left the classroom with a few of my friends. “Yuuno-kun,” I called out to one of them happily. My childhood friend looked over his shoulder and waved while waiting for me. “Study group this week?” I asked hopefully. Unlike me, Yuuno was a child prodigy and retained all information just by hearing or reading it. I've never seen him study, but he was always tutoring other students.

“Of course, Nanoha-san.” We walked together, blending in with the mix of countless students all wearing dressed up clothing. I was wearing a modest skirt with pantyhose, complete with dress shoes and a nice looking top. Yuuno was donned in a suit and tie that really complimented his long hair swept back into a neat ponytail. His eyes widened slightly before he nodded in a direction where a black and purple motorcycle was pulling up into a parking space. “Wow, look at that.”

I turned my eyes to take in the sight of a female removing herself from the motorcycle slowly. Tight pants that I assumed to be leather clung to her like a second skin, ending in an inappropriate low cut waist that revealed side-tie pantie strings. Her stomach was exposed as well before a massive chest was covered with a matching black tank top. Purple bra straps were visible, not covered by the tiny straps keeping her shirt up. Finally the helmet was removed and blond hair spilled out everywhere. A light sparkle came from her wrist, signaling to my growing fear that the woman was, indeed, Fate.

The woman didn't seem to notice me yet and simply put her bike on it's center stand, heading to the Union building. Several people turned their eyes to look at her but Fate didn't seem to find this odd, and disappeared through the doors. “I know campus allows anyone to come use the food court but still,” Yuuno was speaking next to me. “They could at least respect our dress code a little bit?”

“Y-yeah,” I blushed, not knowing if I should reveal that I knew that girl or to just leave it be. My stomach chose to growl at me, getting a chuckle from my friend. “I'm going to get something to eat. I'll see you later?”

“You got it.” Yuuno waved lightly and continued along his way, leaving me alone to walk to the Union. As I walked through the doors cool air greeted me along with the masses of people talking and having a good time. Several students were studying while eating while others were laughing and having a good time. I was normally one of the ones who read and ate at the same time since I didn't have many friends. I was, however, quite popular. This became noticeable as a few people waved at me and whispered, pointing. I made it into this school with almost a perfect score on the entrance exam, which immediately made me a legend. I took summer classes and fall classes before the start of my first year as well, making me be in classes with second and third year students despite myself being a freshman.

I looked around the food court and mentally debated my choices before deciding on some Chinese. Ten minutes of waiting later rewarded me with a to-go box of lo mein with both hot and spicy chicken as well as peppered beef. I had an hour to kill before my next class so I took my time eating while I read over my last class's notes to make sure it all sank into my head. Near the end I finished off my drink and meal, licking the spicy flavor from my lips and crunching some ice to try and ease the stinging. Times like this I wish I got the larger drink instead and debated getting up to buy another to help rid the flame in my mouth.

In the end I simply tossed my remainders in the trash and walked outside into the hot sun. The water fountain next to the stairs had an 'out of order' sign on it and I sighed. Just my luck. My eyes looked around and I spotted Fate sitting on her bike while eating something. The logical part of me said to stay away while on campus but the girl in me made my feet walk over to my friend to greet her. “Fate-chan,” I spoke softly, making he turn and look at me with a spoon in her mouth.

“Hello,” She grinned and pulled the plastic from her lips, sucking off what was on it. “Fancy meeting you here.”

“Well this is my school,” I informed while stopping to stand in front of her. The blond turned to sit sideways on her seat, smiling at me when I looked away from her jiggling. “Why don't you wear more supportive stuff?”

“They don't fit right, pervert.” she countered happily. I looked back at her and noticed a chocolate covered waffle bowl inside of a cup. “Coldstone ice cream,” She informed me. “Vanilla with cookie dough, chocolate chips, fudge, and caramel. Want a bite?”

The thought of cooling my mouth with ice cream was definitely a plus. “Yes, please, I'd love a bite.” I also had a weakness for icecream.

“Say 'ahhh' then.” Fate scooped up a bite onto her spoon and held it up.

“Huh?”

“I'll feed you,” she informed me, waving the spoon lightly. “Open up.”

I blushed darkly. “I... can eat by myself...”

“Then no ice cream for you.” She ate the bite and licked her lips. I pouted at her as she held up another bite but when I didn't bend over to take it she ate it as well. Seeing the cold treat made me even more aware of the blazing sun above me and the stiffness of my outfit. I was sweating lightly and my lunch still told me that my mouth wanted water. “One more chance,” Fate offered.

“...Ahhh...” I leaned forward and opened my mouth, allowing her to feed me. Once the icecrem was safely inside my mouth I pulled back quickly and darted my eyes to make sure no one saw it.

“Good, isn't it?” She asked, eyeing me as she ran her tongue along the plastic spoon to clean it off of what I didn't take. The motion made me color and look away. “Want some more?”

Yes I did, but I don't think I could stand being fed anymore without dieing of embarrassment. “No thank you.”

“I'm going to throw it away then.”

“In that case-!” I turned back and saw the spoon being held up again. “...Mou!”

“Come on, don't be afraid. I won't bite...” I reluctantly moved forward and took a step when she pulled it backwards. Another step rewarded me with the ice cream and Fate looked really happy now that I was standing right in front of her. “See? Not so bad.”

“I... guess not...” I accepted another bite. “This your bike?”

“No, I stole it.” She teased, making me realize that it was a rather silly question. “Want to go for a ride?”

“I have class in about twenty minutes.”

“I can come by later and pick you up?”

“Are you a stalker?” I asked, half kidding. “Three days in a row now.”

“You came to me,” she pointed out logically. “I just wanted ice cream.”

Point taken. “I don't think I should... my parents would kill me if they saw me-” I took another bite before finishing. “-saw me riding on one of those.”

“I have a spare helmet,” She insisted. “No one will know it was you.”

“...Maybe...” I evaded it, looking at the bike and trying to hide building desire to just hop on it now.

“Tell you what,” Fate handed me the rest of her ice cream and shifted so she was sitting properly, pulling it off the center stand. “What time are you off?”

“Three.”

Fate started her bike and put on her helmet. “I will be here at three. If you want a ride I'll take you home...If not, that's fine too.”

I observed her curiously. “You said that last time...”

“And you came,” She winked at me and started walking it backwards. “See you then, Sexy.”

I almost dropped the ice cream, blushing hard as she revved her bike and popped a wheelie for a few feet before driving off at speeds that couldn't possibly be safe. Now alone, I turned and started walking to my next class, enjoying what was left of the ice cream along the way. 'She is so weird...' I told myself mentally, eyes starting just a few feet in front of me down at the sidewalk. 'But... She's so interesting...'

A.) Nanoha
B.) Fate

@illidan182: About time you signed up ^^ Thanks for all the reviews you've left me <3. If you need anything don't hesitate to PM me.

*points left* New avatar by Haru, who was kind enough to make it for me. Thanks Haru!

*voting for "Yunno is a paladine"*
he is a genius
would be handy for the paladine to have such a member and it would be more interesting for the story

cute how Fate managed to feed Nanoha
real win
can agree with the others
motorbikes and Fate is always excellent

for Vote:
A
inscure Nanoha ftw


btw
nice avatar
looks good

great work Haru

Originally Posted by Satashi

Help while picking who to go with in POV:

Nanoha: will get to see how she feels about riding with Fate, and having her arms around Fate.

Fate: Will get to see how she feels with Nanoha's arms around her.

Both will get extras.

So don't forget to think like that when you choose

spoilers are mean...
stop spoiling us

Originally Posted by wanwan1203

Oh I see. It's ok. You can just do the leather suit. >.> <.< >.> *hides*

Ooh and no, Natsuki Kuga is always gonna be the number 1 girl for me! Fate comes in 3rd, rivaled only by Kan-u Unchou! And no amount of leather is gonna change that. Woot!!! I'm sorry Fate! D: lol

KanU to the top
that's the way to go

[Mae]

Mmm, I want ice cream fed to me by Fate.

A please

[Satashi]

Voting closed, Nanoha wins :3

[wanwan1203]

Originally Posted by Gillian

KanU to the top
that's the way to go

I can't put Kan-u on the top spot for fear of massive bloodloss.. T-T Natsuki generates moderate bloodloss, much healthier and safer for me. Fate on the other hand is just so moe I want to turn her into a plushy and hug her. But Vampire!Fate is testing me... must. resist.

[Satashi]

Nanoha

Spoiler for Vampire!Fate pt.12:

When my lab was over I realized that I had made a tiny mistake. I told Fate that I was off at three, which was true, but I forgot to mention that my class was all the way across campus. It would take me at least ten minutes to get there if I walked briskly. With a small sigh I moved past people as carefully as I could in hopes of making Fate not wait too long for me. I was originally torn between accepting the ride home or not but after two classes I had enough time to really consider it. I have always wanted to ride on a motorcycle before and this was my chance. If I was covered in a helmet and wearing what mostly everyone at this college wore, then there was no chance I would be caught.

Still, I was nervous, and the sight of Fate sitting on her bike filing her nails did little to ease the feeling in my gut. She was interested in me, that much was obvious. I didn't know exactly how to consider her just yet but the fact remained that I was interested in her as well. She was everything I was told not to be and yet she had this charm around her that kept drawing me in. She was exceedingly friendly and always seemed to be smiling. Her eyes were so deep I felt as if I would lose myself in the red orbs every time we talked. I was always taught to stay away from people who seemed as if they would be dangerous but Fate was different... Even though she dressed like a...kind of a whorish Gothic style, she seemed to be just the opposite. Granted, she flirted with me, but she told me when we first met that she was interested and I've yet to see anything to go against that. I suppose a part of me was using this as a test, to see exactly what she would do if I put my trust in her. If she did something unexpected I could simply hop off her bike at a red light or stop sign.

I felt really bad about doubting my new friend so much...

Fate waved at me and I trotted the last few steps to her. “You came,” She told me cheerfully. “I was starting to worry.”

“I'm sorry, my class was way over there.” I pointed the way I walked. “It took me a while to make it back here.”

“It's okay, I'd wait all night if I had to.”

“Even though you were worrying?” I teased, getting a chuckle.

“Here,” she handed me a purple helmet. “Fold your hair up in a bun and hold it while putting this on.” I did as she requested and found that the somewhat over sized helmet fit me perfectly thanks to my hair. “Have you ever ridden before?” Her hands went to fasten the strap under my chin for me and I shook my head when I was able to. “It's easy, just sit behind me.”

I moved to carefully swing my leg over the seat while keeping my skirt covering everything it should. “Like this?” My voice came out muffled but Fate's reply came in my ears gently though a headset that I just noticed.

“Just like that,” She told me through her microphone in her helmet. “When I lean, lean with me. You don't have to over-do anything, just keep your front to my back and we'll be fine.” She started up her bike and I felt it pulse under me as she walked it backwards.

“Where do I hold on?”

“On me, silly.” She teased happily. “Feel free to grab my boobs, I won't mind.”

“Pervert.” I wrapped my arms around her waist and gripped when she started moving forward.

“Nanoha, Baby, I can't breathe.” Her words made me blush but I still released her a little. “Phew, thanks. Calm down, I've been driving for a really long time.” I looked around, shocked at how much simpler this was than I had originally thought. I was expecting harsh wind and leaning every which way as if I was balancing on a tight rope but instead I found the easy ride across campus to be very pleasant. “So how was class?” Fate's voice came again, startling me just a little at hearing it so cleanly next to my ear again.

“Okay!” I shouted back to make up for the wind noise, making the girl I was holding onto wince.

“Nanoha, speak normally, you have a mic.”

“Sorry,” I squeaked out. “I'm not used to this.”

“Don't worry,” She laughed at me and I pouted at her back. “So, anything interesting?”

“I met a weird girl at lunch again,” I teased back, pressing against her as we turned onto the main road. My arms encircled her stomach and I blushed a little as our skin touched fully. My palms felt her stomach move with each breath she took. “She bribed me with ice cream.”

Fate's voice was happy. “Sounds like my type of girl. You should keep that one.”

“I can't seem to shake her,” I went along with the joke, getting confidence again to look around at higher speeds. “This is really neat.”

“It's like flying,” she agreed. “Sometimes when I'm annoyed I will just drive.”

“Where to?”

“Wherever the wind blows,” She answered me honestly and I got the feeling that she was being serious with her answer. “Do you have anything that lets you escape?”

I pondered the question, shifting lightly as we came to a stop at a red light. Fate's leg went out to balance and I held onto her more, afraid that I might slip off when she started again. “Studying?”

“Is that fun?”

“I guess? Sometimes I wish I could do more, though.”

“Like what?”

“Something... dangerous?” I yelped lightly when she took off faster than I thought she would and grabbed a hold of her.

“Oooh, baby!”

I released her breasts and blushed furiously. “Sorry.”

“I don't mind at all,” She giggled. “But really, dangerous? Like how?”

“I've wanted to bungee jump for a long time.”

“Let's go.”

“Huh?”

“Bungee jump. There is a place by the arcade center across town.”

I felt the color drain from my face. “What? Really?” I knew there was a place to do it but I never expected her to randomly say to go.

“Yeah! Right now!” She shifted gears and sped off. “You have two blocks to stop me.”

I swallowed thickly. “I... I need to open my bakery.”

Fate didn't slow down. “It will only take thirty minutes.”

I tried to come up with another Excuse. “I... I...”

“Few seconds. Say stop now or we're going.”

I couldn't come up with a reason not to and I lost my chance as she sped by our turn. “I'm nervous...”

“I'll jump too,” She comforted me. “It's fun.” We stopped at another red light and her head turned back to look at me through the black tinted visor. “Trust me.”

“...Okay.” I held on tighter,. “I trust you.”

“Woohoo!” Fate jerked forward again, rearing the bike's front up a few inches and making me almost scream out. Despite the fear, adrenaline was rushing in me from it. I was going to do bungee jump! I shifted my body slightly and looked over her shoulder, getting even more excited as the wind rushed around us.

Vote Help:

Spoiler for tips:

Until everyone gets used to swapping POVs at will, I'll give a few tips on selecting.

Nanoha: Will go through her mind as Fate helps her overcome herself and how she feels about her new friend. She may notice something or think about Fate's actions.

Fate: Will give insight on how she teases Nanoha and helps her do things she's scared of but wants to do. Anything her vampire senses catch will be noted as well.

A.) Nanoha
B.) Fate

[TheShinySword]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Nanoha

Spoiler for Vampire!Fate pt.12:

When my lab was over I realized that I had made a tiny mistake. I told Fate that I was off at three, which was true, but I forgot to mention that my class was all the way across campus. It would take me at least ten minutes to get there if I walked briskly. With a small sigh I moved past people as carefully as I could in hopes of making Fate not wait too long for me. I was originally torn between accepting the ride home or not but after two classes I had enough time to really consider it. I have always wanted to ride on a motorcycle before and this was my chance. If I was covered in a helmet and wearing what mostly everyone at this college wore, then there was no chance I would be caught.

Still, I was nervous, and the sight of Fate sitting on her bike filing her nails did little to ease the feeling in my gut. She was interested in me, that much was obvious. I didn't know exactly how to consider her just yet but the fact remained that I was interested in her as well. She was everything I was told not to be and yet she had this charm around her that kept drawing me in. She was exceedingly friendly and always seemed to be smiling. Her eyes were so deep I felt as if I would lose myself in the red orbs every time we talked. I was always taught to stay away from people who seemed as if they would be dangerous but Fate was different... Even though she dressed like a...kind of a whorish Gothic style, she seemed to be just the opposite. Granted, she flirted with me, but she told me when we first met that she was interested and I've yet to see anything to go against that. I suppose a part of me was using this as a test, to see exactly what she would do if I put my trust in her. If she did something unexpected I could simply hop off her bike at a red light or stop sign.

I felt really bad about doubting my new friend so much...

Fate waved at me and I trotted the last few steps to her. “You came,” She told me cheerfully. “I was starting to worry.”

“I'm sorry, my class was way over there.” I pointed the way I walked. “It took me a while to make it back here.”

“It's okay, I'd wait all night if I had to.”

“Even though you were worrying?” I teased, getting a chuckle.

“Here,” she handed me a purple helmet. “Fold your hair up in a bun and hold it while putting this on.” I did as she requested and found that the somewhat over sized helmet fit me perfectly thanks to my hair. “Have you ever ridden before?” Her hands went to fasten the strap under my chin for me and I shook my head when I was able to. “It's easy, just sit behind me.”

I moved to carefully swing my leg over the seat while keeping my skirt covering everything it should. “Like this?” My voice came out muffled but Fate's reply came in my ears gently though a headset that I just noticed.

“Just like that,” She told me through her microphone in her helmet. “When I lean, lean with me. You don't have to over-do anything, just keep your front to my back and we'll be fine.” She started up her bike and I felt it pulse under me as she walked it backwards.

“Where do I hold on?”

“On me, silly.” She teased happily. “Feel free to grab my boobs, I won't mind.”

“Pervert.” I wrapped my arms around her waist and gripped when she started moving forward.

“Nanoha, Baby, I can't breathe.” Her words made me blush but I still released her a little. “Phew, thanks. Calm down, I've been driving for a really long time.” I looked around, shocked at how much simpler this was than I had originally thought. I was expecting harsh wind and leaning every which way as if I was balancing on a tight rope but instead I found the easy ride across campus to be very pleasant. “So how was class?” Fate's voice came again, startling me just a little at hearing it so cleanly next to my ear again.

“Okay!” I shouted back to make up for the wind noise, making the girl I was holding onto wince.

“Nanoha, speak normally, you have a mic.”

“Sorry,” I squeaked out. “I'm not used to this.”

“Don't worry,” She laughed at me and I pouted at her back. “So, anything interesting?”

“I met a weird girl at lunch again,” I teased back, pressing against her as we turned onto the main road. My arms encircled her stomach and I blushed a little as our skin touched fully. My palms felt her stomach move with each breath she took. “She bribed me with ice cream.”

Fate's voice was happy. “Sounds like my type of girl. You should keep that one.”

“I can't seem to shake her,” I went along with the joke, getting confidence again to look around at higher speeds. “This is really neat.”

“It's like flying,” she agreed. “Sometimes when I'm annoyed I will just drive.”

“Where to?”

“Wherever the wind blows,” She answered me honestly and I got the feeling that she was being serious with her answer. “Do you have anything that lets you escape?”

I pondered the question, shifting lightly as we came to a stop at a red light. Fate's leg went out to balance and I held onto her more, afraid that I might slip off when she started again. “Studying?”

“Is that fun?”

“I guess? Sometimes I wish I could do more, though.”

“Like what?”

“Something... dangerous?” I yelped lightly when she took off faster than I thought she would and grabbed a hold of her.

“Oooh, baby!”

I released her breasts and blushed furiously. “Sorry.”

“I don't mind at all,” She giggled. “But really, dangerous? Like how?”

“I've wanted to bungee jump for a long time.”

“Let's go.”

“Huh?”

“Bungee jump. There is a place by the arcade center across town.”

I felt the color drain from my face. “What? Really?” I knew there was a place to do it but I never expected her to randomly say to go.

“Yeah! Right now!” She shifted gears and sped off. “You have two blocks to stop me.”

I swallowed thickly. “I... I need to open my bakery.”

Fate didn't slow down. “It will only take thirty minutes.”

I tried to come up with another Excuse. “I... I...”

“Few seconds. Say stop now or we're going.”

I couldn't come up with a reason not to and I lost my chance as she sped by our turn. “I'm nervous...”

“I'll jump too,” She comforted me. “It's fun.” We stopped at another red light and her head turned back to look at me through the black tinted visor. “Trust me.”

“...Okay.” I held on tighter,. “I trust you.”

“Woohoo!” Fate jerked forward again, rearing the bike's front up a few inches and making me almost scream out. Despite the fear, adrenaline was rushing in me from it. I was going to do bungee jump! I shifted my body slightly and looked over her shoulder, getting even more excited as the wind rushed around us.

Vote Help:

Spoiler for tips:

Until everyone gets used to swapping POVs at will, I'll give a few tips on selecting.

Fate: Will give insight on how she teases Nanoha and helps her do things she's scared of but wants to do. Anything her vampire senses catch will be noted as well.

Nanoha: Will go through her mind as Fate helps her overcome herself and how she feels about her new friend. She may notice something or think about Fate's actions.

I... I can't decided... *takes out coin*

Oh heads it's...

B

then(wait they're the normal voting guide lines right? A= Nanoha B=Fate)


On a side note I can't look at Satashi's new ave with getting distracted by Fate's cleavage TT-TT

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by TheShinySword

I... I can't decided... *takes out coin*

Oh heads it's...



then (wait they're the normal voting guide lines right? A= Nanoha B=Fate)

Yes, normal voting. Sorry I forgot *edits post*

A always= Nanoha
B always = Fate

[illidan182]

Hmm, I really like seeing Nanoha's POV, this next one would prolly be good. Buuuuut lets go with: ini meny miny mou (was that right at all o.O?)

B

I'm in total agreement TSS... *stares*

[Mae]

B

I'm excited for the bungee jumping. ^^

[wanwan1203]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Nanoha

Spoiler for Vampire!Fate pt.12:

When my lab was over I realized that I had made a tiny mistake. I told Fate that I was off at three, which was true, but I forgot to mention that my class was all the way across campus. It would take me at least ten minutes to get there if I walked briskly. With a small sigh I moved past people as carefully as I could in hopes of making Fate not wait too long for me. I was originally torn between accepting the ride home or not but after two classes I had enough time to really consider it. I have always wanted to ride on a motorcycle before and this was my chance. If I was covered in a helmet and wearing what mostly everyone at this college wore, then there was no chance I would be caught.

Still, I was nervous, and the sight of Fate sitting on her bike filing her nails did little to ease the feeling in my gut. She was interested in me, that much was obvious. I didn't know exactly how to consider her just yet but the fact remained that I was interested in her as well. She was everything I was told not to be and yet she had this charm around her that kept drawing me in. She was exceedingly friendly and always seemed to be smiling. Her eyes were so deep I felt as if I would lose myself in the red orbs every time we talked. I was always taught to stay away from people who seemed as if they would be dangerous but Fate was different... Even though she dressed like a...kind of a whorish Gothic style, she seemed to be just the opposite. Granted, she flirted with me, but she told me when we first met that she was interested and I've yet to see anything to go against that. I suppose a part of me was using this as a test, to see exactly what she would do if I put my trust in her. If she did something unexpected I could simply hop off her bike at a red light or stop sign.

I felt really bad about doubting my new friend so much...

Fate waved at me and I trotted the last few steps to her. “You came,” She told me cheerfully. “I was starting to worry.”

“I'm sorry, my class was way over there.” I pointed the way I walked. “It took me a while to make it back here.”

“It's okay, I'd wait all night if I had to.”

“Even though you were worrying?” I teased, getting a chuckle.

“Here,” she handed me a purple helmet. “Fold your hair up in a bun and hold it while putting this on.” I did as she requested and found that the somewhat over sized helmet fit me perfectly thanks to my hair. “Have you ever ridden before?” Her hands went to fasten the strap under my chin for me and I shook my head when I was able to. “It's easy, just sit behind me.”

I moved to carefully swing my leg over the seat while keeping my skirt covering everything it should. “Like this?” My voice came out muffled but Fate's reply came in my ears gently though a headset that I just noticed.

“Just like that,” She told me through her microphone in her helmet. “When I lean, lean with me. You don't have to over-do anything, just keep your front to my back and we'll be fine.” She started up her bike and I felt it pulse under me as she walked it backwards.

“Where do I hold on?”

“On me, silly.” She teased happily. “Feel free to grab my boobs, I won't mind.”

“Pervert.” I wrapped my arms around her waist and gripped when she started moving forward.

“Nanoha, Baby, I can't breathe.” Her words made me blush but I still released her a little. “Phew, thanks. Calm down, I've been driving for a really long time.” I looked around, shocked at how much simpler this was than I had originally thought. I was expecting harsh wind and leaning every which way as if I was balancing on a tight rope but instead I found the easy ride across campus to be very pleasant. “So how was class?” Fate's voice came again, startling me just a little at hearing it so cleanly next to my ear again.

“Okay!” I shouted back to make up for the wind noise, making the girl I was holding onto wince.

“Nanoha, speak normally, you have a mic.”

“Sorry,” I squeaked out. “I'm not used to this.”

“Don't worry,” She laughed at me and I pouted at her back. “So, anything interesting?”

“I met a weird girl at lunch again,” I teased back, pressing against her as we turned onto the main road. My arms encircled her stomach and I blushed a little as our skin touched fully. My palms felt her stomach move with each breath she took. “She bribed me with ice cream.”

Fate's voice was happy. “Sounds like my type of girl. You should keep that one.”

“I can't seem to shake her,” I went along with the joke, getting confidence again to look around at higher speeds. “This is really neat.”

“It's like flying,” she agreed. “Sometimes when I'm annoyed I will just drive.”

“Where to?”

“Wherever the wind blows,” She answered me honestly and I got the feeling that she was being serious with her answer. “Do you have anything that lets you escape?”

I pondered the question, shifting lightly as we came to a stop at a red light. Fate's leg went out to balance and I held onto her more, afraid that I might slip off when she started again. “Studying?”

“Is that fun?”

“I guess? Sometimes I wish I could do more, though.”

“Like what?”

“Something... dangerous?” I yelped lightly when she took off faster than I thought she would and grabbed a hold of her.

“Oooh, baby!”

I released her breasts and blushed furiously. “Sorry.”

“I don't mind at all,” She giggled. “But really, dangerous? Like how?”

“I've wanted to bungee jump for a long time.”

“Let's go.”

“Huh?”

“Bungee jump. There is a place by the arcade center across town.”

I felt the color drain from my face. “What? Really?” I knew there was a place to do it but I never expected her to randomly say to go.

“Yeah! Right now!” She shifted gears and sped off. “You have two blocks to stop me.”

I swallowed thickly. “I... I need to open my bakery.”

Fate didn't slow down. “It will only take thirty minutes.”

I tried to come up with another Excuse. “I... I...”

“Few seconds. Say stop now or we're going.”

I couldn't come up with a reason not to and I lost my chance as she sped by our turn. “I'm nervous...”

“I'll jump too,” She comforted me. “It's fun.” We stopped at another red light and her head turned back to look at me through the black tinted visor. “Trust me.”

“...Okay.” I held on tighter,. “I trust you.”

“Woohoo!” Fate jerked forward again, rearing the bike's front up a few inches and making me almost scream out. Despite the fear, adrenaline was rushing in me from it. I was going to do bungee jump! I shifted my body slightly and looked over her shoulder, getting even more excited as the wind rushed around us.

Vote Help:

Spoiler for tips:

Until everyone gets used to swapping POVs at will, I'll give a few tips on selecting.

Nanoha: Will go through her mind as Fate helps her overcome herself and how she feels about her new friend. She may notice something or think about Fate's actions.

Fate: Will give insight on how she teases Nanoha and helps her do things she's scared of but wants to do. Anything her vampire senses catch will be noted as well.

A.) Nanoha
B.) Fate

bew- bewb grabbing?...

*covers nose*

I vote B!

Feito-chan..

wanwan, you pervert!! *sigh* I'm hopeless..

[ghazghkull]

I will sit this vote out :3

Either is good :3

[TheShinySword]

Originally Posted by wanwan1203

*covers nose*


Feito-chan..

wanwan, you pervert!! *sigh* I'm hopeless..

There there you're not alone

btw: Where does your the quote in your sig come from.


and....

new part of
The Phantom of the Lyrical

You know I really like Yuuno XD I know a lot of people don't but I like him and there ended up being a good deal of him in here. Though this is probably going to be the last time there's more him then Fate in a part (which I admit to being happy about).

Spoiler for The Angel of Music and A Childhood Friend:

The after party was well underway but Nanoha wanted nothing to do with it. After being mobbed by person after person Nanoha wanted nothing more then to be out of there and alone to think. So she had retreated to where no one would look for her.

Nanoha sat alone in the small chapel in the very very back of the theater. The chapel wasn’t for any particular religion as so few were actually religious. It was just for praying in general, praying to whomever you wanted to be listening.

Nanoha wasn’t actually praying, she never came here to do that. She was just thinking and trying to calm herself down. Even now she was incredibly excited. She couldn’t remember having such an important day since she was first recruited. To top it all off Yuuno was back in her life that alone made her happy. Of course there was someone else who was very important in her life.

Spoiler for Angel of Music:

“Brava Brava Bravissma.” That sweet voice came down from the ceiling, Nanoha couldn’t figure out how she did it but her angel was always there when Nanoha needed her. Nanoha smiled to herself. Warmth grew in her chest, being praised by her angel like that made Nanoha happier then most everything else.

“Nanoha Nanoha,” Arf’s voice bounced down the hall to the chapel.

“Nanoha,” The angel’s voice faded away.

“Where in the world have you been hiding?” Arf walked into the room with a giggle. She was in her little kid form. She said it was easier on Alicia when she was like that so outside of rehearsals she stayed like that.

Arf sat down next to Nanoha, “Really, you were perfect!

“I only wish I knew your secret!” She stuck out her tongue playfully. “Who is your great tutor?”

Nanoha shook her head, “Honestly Arf you sing better then me.”

Arf shook her head, “No way I’m useless and master says you’re really good.”

Nanoha’s face brightened. “Really?”

“Mm,” Arf nodded happily. “Yeah yeah yeah! She gets really happy when you’re around too. But…” Arf leaned up into Nanoha’s face. “You still haven’t answered my question.”

Nanoha scratched her head. “Well you remember when I first came here?”

Arf nodded.

“Well the first night I was here I came down here to be away for a moment and while I was down here I heard a voice.”

“…A voice,” Arf eyed her suspiciously, obviously not believing her.

“Really I know it’s silly but you see when I was little my father used to tell me about the Angel of Music.”

“Nanoha…”

“Father once spoke of an angel

“I used to dream she'd appear.

“Now as I sing, I can sense her. And I know she's here.” Nanoha took Arf’s hands and stood up.

“Here in this room she calls me softly somewhere inside hiding.

“Somehow I know she's always with me. She - the unseen genius.”

Nanoha and Arf stared to walk out of the room and down the hall.

“Nanoha, you must have been dreaming,” Arf looked sad like she had been expecting something better. “Stories like this can't come true.”

Nanoha opened her mouth to protest but Arf stopped her.

“Nanoha, you're talking in riddles and it's not like you.”

Nanoha shook her head and threw up her hands, “Angel of Music! Guide and guardian! Grant to me your glory!”

Arf shook her head. “Who is this angel? Who…”

They both started at once, “Angel of Music! Hide no longer! Secret and strange angel!”

“You’re overdramatic Nanoha,” Arf giggled. “But if you don’t want to tell me the truth then fine.” She pouted and puffed out her cheeks.

“Silly little Arf,” Nanoha patted her hair making the little familiar squirm.

“Excuse me.”

The two looked up. It was Alicia. She tapped her cane gently on the ground. “But I believe you have work to do Arf.”

Arf straightened up and nodded. “Of course.” She scampered off.

Alicia placed her arm around Nanoha’s shoulders. “You did good tonight.”

Nanoha nodded, it was no small feat to get Alicia to compliment anyone. “Thank you.”

“She’s pleased.”

Nanoha’s color returned. “I’m glad Nya ha ha.”

Alicia reached into her pocket. She took out a long pink ribbon from her pocket. “Do you know this ribbon? I was asked to deliver it.”

“…I don’t…” then it hit Nanoha. “Yuuno!” She took the ribbon happily giggling. “He does remember me.”

“I believe Mr. Scrya is just now finishing up with the Admirals so if you were to head to your dressing room…” Alicia trailed off leaving Nanoha to fill in the blank.

“Thank you,” Nanoha bowed slightly then ran off.

Alicia chuckled then headed into the chapel for a little chat.




“That was magnificent!” Chrono slapped Zafira and Yuuno on the back.

Zafira winced, “It was good wasn’t it.”

Yuuno chuckled softly, “It was pretty amazing.”

“And only three more months!” Chrono cheered.

“And with Miss Takamachi by our side we’ll be fine,” Zafira started to smile.

Yuuno blushed slightly, “And where is Miss Takamachi?”

“Her dressing room I think,” Chrono rubbed his chin and peered into Yuuno’s face. “Hmm. Does little Yuuno want us to introduce him?”

Yuuno shook his hands. “No no that won’t be necessary.” He started to head to the nearby door. “But thank you.”

“No really we’ll be happy to join you,” Chrono started to follow Yuuno.

Zafira grabbed Chrono’s shoulder, effectively stopping him in his tracts, “I think he’d like to be alone.”

Chrono blinked up at the dogman confused. “Huh?”



Nanoha twirled a red rose with a black ribbon wrapped around it in one hand and twisted the pink ribbon in her other. With Alicia’s warning she’d managed to make it to her dressing room before Yuuno decided to visit her. The room was just as Hayate had left it, except for the masses of flowers that had been sent in by Nanoha’s multitudes of new fans. Of course the only flower that interested her was the single rose on her dresser.

Nanoha rested in her, well Hayate’s actually, chair. Truth be told her angel confused her. When she appeared she spoke very little and when she did speak it was always about Nanoha. Nanoha didn’t even know her name. All Nanoha knew was that, whoever her angel was, she knew the opera house better than anyone else. Well there was one more thing but Nanoha hadn’t confirmed it yet.

Nanoha had good reason to believe the angel was a mage and a very strong one at that. As such Nanoha wanted to recruit her for the TSAB. Of course Nanoha needed proof first.

“Hark is that the little girl I once knew?”

Nanoha’s whole face brightened up as she heard the voice of someone she loved very much and hadn’t seen for far too long.

“I wonder if she’s remembered to brush her hair. Or if she’s remembered to eat and sleep. For the girl I remember would always forget and forgo the basics for training time.”

Nanoha giggled and jumped out of her chair nearly knocking the young man over as she tackled him. “It’s been too long Yuuno! And you remembered my ribbon!”

“Well how could I forget? A very important person told me to return it to her,” He hugged her back, he was just a gentle a hugger as she remembered.

“I have to say I thought you’d return it sooner,” They unwillingly let go of each other in order to better see one another. “Ten years is just too long for a girl to go ribbon less.”

“Don’t tell me the reason your hair is down—” he motioned to my long free flowing hair—“is because I had your only hair tie?”

Nanoha stuck her tongue out a tad. “Maybe,” she teased. “But really,” She took his arm and maneuvered him into a free chair. “How could we keep missing each other?”

“It seems we’ve never been in the same place at the right time,” he sat up very straight. “But I got your letters. I’ve kept every one I admit.”

Nanoha smiled mischievously and sat down across from him, “Keep talking like that and I’ll think you’re stalking me.”

Yuuno chuckled. “How have you been? I mean I always knew you could sing but I didn’t know you could sing like that! Who’s been teaching you?”

Nanoha held a hand to her face, “Well I don’t know if I should tell you.”’

Yuuno sighed, “Nanoha…” He leaned forward.

She folded her hands around her chin, acting like a little girl again. “What if I told you my teacher is the Angel of Music herself?”

“Then I’d remind you that the Angel of Music is a fairy tale and say if you don’t want to tell me there’s no need to make up stories.”

Nanoha smiled, “Then I guess I won’t tell you.” She’d tell Yuuno the full story later when she had done some more investigating. There was no reason for him to get involved yet.

Yuuno shook his head in defeat, “Alright alright,” he waved his hand in the air. “Can I invite you to dinner at least?”

Nanoha’s face fell. “I’m sorry but I can’t.” She wanted to she truly did but as it was the angel probably wanted to speak to her and she couldn’t afford to miss that.

Yuuno visibly saddened. “I see. Well another time perhaps?” He stood up.

“I’d like that,” Nanoha smiled again though it wasn’t as strong. She stood up as well.

Yuuno hugged her one last time before heading for the door, “It’s good to see you again.”

“You too. I’ll see you later.”

Yuuno nodded, “Yes.” Then he left.

Nanoha watched the space where Yuuno had been for a moment before she returned to her seat. There were things to be done.



Alicia watched noiselessly from the shadows as the black figure appeared from the ground. They knew Alicia was there, they always knew Alicia was there and they always said nothing.

Black gloved hands took out a thin key from the folds of a darker than black cloak. With painfully slow meticulous motions the key was placed into the lock. Then the hands turned it carefully making sure their owner could hear the click that ensured the door could not be opened without a key.

Alicia released a small sigh. The figure stiffened but quickly relaxed, after all if they weren’t used to Alicia yet they never would be.

“Are you sure?” Alicia’s question was less then a whisper.

Her answer came to Alicia alone. Never more certain. And with that the Phantom disappeared.

Spoiler for Notes and Change:

Alright we have some major changes here. Most of them have been made because obviously Nanoha and Christine are fundamentally different characters. Also I always thought how Christine was so quick to tell everyone she was being tutored by the angel of music was just asking for the asylum so Nanoha jokes about it.
I also completely changed the scene between Nanoha and Yuuno for various reasons . And of course the last scene is extended.

Thank you for reading

*Fails at disappearing and runs away*


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